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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #60 on: August 08, 2008, 12:42:26 AM »
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@ KonaKaga: thanks for the heads-up. I'll try to change it next time, let me know if I mess it up again. BTW, I love how you give me your thorough reviews, it makes me feel good to know someone takes the time to read and give me opinions.

No problem, it's fun to do since I'm doing it for such a great story!


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We didn't say anything.

We haven't said much since we left the train station.

What is wrong with you, Sayu?

There she is in front of you, and you can't say one word to her.

She could be everything you ever wanted in someone.

Sure, you've been hurt, but you have to move on.

This may be your only chance to tell her.

Say something, you idiot!

You may be a narcissisant on cute and sexy, but you are horrible at talking.
Ahh, Sayu's having some internal conflict, hopefully she can get over it before anything bad happens.

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"Sayu?" you asked.

"Huh?"
I think I spoke to soon, but then again I don't think 'huh' counts as a word XD

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Oh no, we're at my house.

However, you're still holding onto my hand. Please, don't let go.

I don't want you to let me go.[/color]

"Guess I'll see you later," you said.

You start to let go of my hand, but I can't let you leave. Not now, not ever.

I cling onto you tight, hoping you just hold me for eternity.

Who cares about work? I just want you.


"Sayu, what's wrong?" you asked.

"Please..don't leave...me," I said between tears.

"Unfortunately I have to," you replied.

"Why?"

"Because I have to work tomorrow. You should get some rest."

"I don't need rest, I need you."

"It's okay, Sayu. I'll be back soon."
Wow, blue seems to be acting a bit oblivious, no?

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That was when I couldn't take it anymore.

"No!"

I grabbed your arm and I kissed you.

Not the kiss that I wanted, but it was worth it.

You pulled away and I knew...

I knew that I blew it.

I should have known...

You really are dating someone.
Sayu! :cry:

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"I'm..I'm sorry," you said.
Damn you blue! :angry:

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"No, I'm sorry," I tried to explain. "I..I didn't mean to..."

"I think I should leave.."

"I knew it! You were talking to her this morning."

"That wasn't her."

"Then who are you seeing?"

"I'm not seeing anyone."

"I don't believe you.."

"Sayu.."

"No! Don't talk to me, ever again!"

"Sayu, wait!"

I realised this with other chapters as well, but sometimes when two different people are talking, you just leave it as one colour, so sometimes I get a bit confused @_@ Is there a reason you leave it as one colour, or can you just not be bothered? XD Sometimes I think that the person is talking to themselves.

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I run back into the house and up to my room. I jumped onto the bed, crying uncontrollably. I cry myself to sleep that night, knowing that I've already hurt two people.

I hurt Eri, and now I've hurt you.
I thought that Eri hurt Sayu? I think I missed something O_o

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I just can't seem to go on.

Maybe I should just leave..

I should leave the world, besides no one needs me anyway.
No....NO! :cry:
Don't go down that road Sayu! Everyone needs you! At some point everyone has hurt someone else, it's a part of life. There is always someone who needs you!
And I take it that this is Sayu talking, right? Just the wrong colour? Or is it blue? O_O


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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #61 on: August 08, 2008, 12:50:03 AM »
Moar! MOAR!!!

Great chap, CKD!

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #62 on: August 08, 2008, 06:06:45 AM »
@KonaKaga: sorry again..got the colors changed back. Also, remember when Sayu had that fight with Eri? She loved her at first, but couldn't say it..I'll try and get that soon.

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"Sayu, wait!"

She's gone.

I'm the one to blame..it's all my fault.

I always seem to cause trouble for everyone I come in contact with.

Not really, it's just that...

What am I saying?

Maybe she's right. Maybe I should stay away from her.

But...I can't do that.

There's something about you that..well, you always had it.

That cuteness and sexiness that nobody had, mainly because you made sure that you were the only one who did have it.

No wonder you called yourself the 'cute/sexy narcissist' of the group.

I never paid that much attention to it, except only for the show. Now that you've grown up, now it seems that you know how to use it.

So, what do I do?

I know you've been hurt...but I want to make it better.

What am I saying?

You just kissed me.

I have to be honest...I liked it.

Never did I thought you had the nerve to kiss me like that.

I'm sorry I pulled away..when you think about it, I should have stayed.

I know what I have to do now.

I'll find you soon, and when I do, I'll return the favor.

It'll be slow, but well worth it.

Sayu, never did I think that I will be falling in love...with you.

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #63 on: August 08, 2008, 06:12:36 AM »
Omg I want to know who blue is so freaking bad!!!
(I still can't help think its Maki...XD)

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #64 on: August 08, 2008, 06:19:53 AM »
BLUE!!! WHO.ARE.YOU????????
Yeah, I'm kinda getting a Maki vibe too....but this last entry......seems a little.....Miki-like!!! :shocked:

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #65 on: August 08, 2008, 06:40:53 AM »
man every entry is intense!! lol i really want to know who blue is!! i'm really glad that your updates are fast! awesome work!!

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #66 on: August 08, 2008, 09:52:33 PM »
The next day...

"Hello?"

"How have you been?"

I don't believe it..it's you.

"Still there?" you asked.

"Sorry," I laughed.

"Who was you expecting?"

"Ummm...I don't know. Mitsui?"

"You haven't changed. How have you been?"

"Pretty good. How about yourself?"

"Actually, that's what I wanted to talk to you about. Have you seen Sayu recently?"

"She hasn't talked to anybody all day."

"I knew it. It's all my fault."

"What happened?"

You told me what Sayu did to you.

I never thought she would do that to you.

To be honest, I always thought that her and Eri would always be a couple.

"Don't feel bad," I replied. "I'm sure it'll be all right."


"Will you talk to her for me?" you asked me.

"I'll try to," I promised. "I can't promise you anything though."

"Just tell her I'll call her today, OK?"

"I will. Just answer me one question though: Do you love her?"

Do I love her?

I believe I do.

No, I dolove her.

"Yes," I answered. "I believe I do love her."

"Don't worry," I told her. "I won't tell Sayu about this. I'll let you do it."

"Thank you. I'll call her tonight."

"It's great to hear from you again. We have to do something sometime."

"I know. I've missed you guys."

We talk for a few more minutes before you had to go. I promised you again that I would talk to Sayu for you.

I hope she listens to me.

More importantly, I hope she listens to you.

To be honest, I like to see you hook up with Sayu.

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #67 on: August 08, 2008, 10:04:26 PM »
Hmm, someone close to Mitsui is red. Who?????? :lol:
You've got me addicted! :P

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #68 on: August 08, 2008, 10:30:52 PM »
okay so i went to wiki.theppn to research possible reds and :shocked:
there are two ppl who fit this:
 1) Koharu whose color is red... and mittsi says she sees her  as a rival
 2) Yossi... hence the :shocked: because apparently Mitsui really close to her like an older sister

which means.... a) blue is SOOOO Rika or b)welll if red is koharu then who knows... *goes back to wiki.theppn* :shocked: OGAWA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (her color was blue when she was still in MM and is from the same prefecture as Koharu so that would be there connection)
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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #69 on: August 08, 2008, 11:06:11 PM »
Red is likely to be koharu if its going by momusu colors.
Because, the "she hasn't talked to anyone all day" part
only someone from the current momusu with her should know that, right?
just speculation, though.

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #70 on: August 08, 2008, 11:13:18 PM »
Ahh, sorry that I didn't review the previous chapter :sweatdrop: I read it, I just forgot to review it cause I went out and my dad closed all my screens >_>
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The next day...

"Hello?"

"How have you been?"

I don't believe it..it's you.

"Still there?" you asked.

"Sorry," I laughed.

"Who was you expecting?"

"Ummm...I don't know. Mitsui?"
So there's a new character, red.
So Koharu or Miki.
I doubt it's Koharu more than Miki.
So CharmKitty friendship?

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"You haven't changed. How have you been?"

"Pretty good. How about yourself?"

"Actually, that's what I wanted to talk to you about. Have you seen Sayu recently?"

"She hasn't talked to anybody all day."

"I knew it. It's all my fault."

"What happened?"

You told me what Sayu did to you.

I never thought she would do that to you.

To be honest, I always thought that her and Eri would always be a couple.

I'm still kinda thinking Miki.

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"Don't feel bad," I replied. "I'm sure it'll be all right."[/color]

"Will you talk to her for me?" you asked me.

"I'll try to," I promised. "I can't promise you anything though."

"Just tell her I'll call her today, OK?"

"I will. Just answer me one question though: Do you love her?"

Do I love her?

I believe I do.

No, I dolove her.

"Yes," I answered. "I believe I do love her."

"Don't worry," I told her. "I won't tell Sayu about this. I'll let you do it."

"Thank you. I'll call her tonight."

"It's great to hear from you again. We have to do something sometime."

"I know. I've missed you guys."

We talk for a few more minutes before you had to go. I promised you again that I would talk to Sayu for you.

I hope she listens to me.

More importantly, I hope she listens to you.

To be honest, I like to see you hook up with Sayu.


So red thinks that blue and Sayu would be good together?
It seems like in the way it is described that Sayu might be slightly hesitant to talk to red...
But I have to agree with x_sleephead's comment about how it's likely to be Kohrau. But who knows, you might be writing it set when Miki was still in MM.
Agh! I don't know anymore! XD
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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #71 on: August 09, 2008, 04:11:58 AM »
Why?

Why me?

Why do I deserve this?

All this pain, the torture?

Why did you do this to me?

I don't care about anything anymore!

I feel like...like I wanna die.


"Sayu?" you asked, "can I come in?"

"I don't feel like talking right now," I said.

"Please? It's just me and you."

"I don't want anybody here."

"Just hear me out first, OK?"

There was nothing i could do. You let yourself in without a word spoken.

I look at you and wonder how you do it.

You flashed your smile at me.

You come over to me and wrap your arms around me.

It's not the same embrace as "hers" was, but I don't want to see her again.

Why did "she" do this to me?


"It'll be all right," you said repeatedly. "Everything will be all right."

"I..I hate..."

"Let it out Shige-san, what's wrong?"

"I...I hate her!"

I didn't say a word. I just conitnue to console her, knowing that I would have to break the news.

Okay...now.

"Someone called me just now," I told Sayu. "She says that she'll call you tonight."

"Did you ask who it was?" I asked you.

"No," I lied. "She just said that she'll call you tonight."

I already knew who it was..

I swore to myself I didn't want to talk to her again.

But, maybe she can give me an explanation.

Then again...

I won't know until she calls me...

But I still don't want to talk to her

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #72 on: August 09, 2008, 04:16:19 AM »
Just as I'm signing out, I see this! And I simply can't go and pretend I didn't see it!!!!
Hmm, red is definitely starting to sound like Miki!!! The "Shige-san" part!!!
Awww, Sayu is breaking my heart!! :cry:

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #73 on: August 09, 2008, 04:25:44 AM »
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Why?

Why me?

Why do I deserve this?

All this pain, the torture?

Why did you do this to me?

I don't care about anything anymore!

I feel like...like I wanna die.
Remember what I said Sayu? :scolding: No dying! But at the same time I feel so bad for you :cry:

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"Sayu?" you asked, "can I come in?"

"I don't feel like talking right now," I said.

"Please? It's just me and you."

"I don't want anybody here."

"Just hear me out first, OK?"

There was nothing i could do. You let yourself in without a word spoken.

I look at you and wonder how you do it.

You flashed your smile at me.

You come over to me and wrap your arms around me.

It's not the same embrace as "hers" was, but I don't want to see her again.
Red appears. Sounds like Miki~
*Reads on to look for clues*

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Why did "she" do this to me?

"It'll be all right," you said repeatedly. "Everything will be all right."

"I..I hate..."

"Let it out Shige-san, what's wrong?"

"I...I hate her!"

I didn't say a word. I just conitnue to console her, knowing that I would have to break the news.

Okay...now.

I swear that it's Miki!

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"Someone called me just now," I told Sayu. "She says that she'll call you tonight."

"Did you ask who it was?" I asked you.

"No," I lied. "She just said that she'll call you tonight."

I already knew who it was..

I swore to myself I didn't want to talk to her again.

But, maybe she can give me an explanation.

Then again...

I won't know until she calls me...

But I still don't want to talk to her

Sayu, the only way you can get over someone is if you talk to them, who knows, maybe something that you never expected might happen...

Oh, the story is getting really angsty, I can't wait to see what happens in the next few chapters.


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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #74 on: August 09, 2008, 07:53:01 PM »
Please answer me...

Please, answer the phone!

I know I hurt you, but you can't be mad at me forever...

Why does everyone leave me?

Thank God I never tell people how I really feel.

But you make it so hard for me to break my promise.

I hate to tell you, because that's just me.

If I told anybody about how I felt, you would leave me too.

I guess you can say, we're both similar.

Still, please answer the phone!


* * * * * * * *

I heard your phone ring.

I'm still thinking about answering it.

You hurt me the night before, so why should I answer you?

*ring*

The phone's ringing again.

I wished it stop!

No Sayu! Answer the phone, now!

I should but...

No buts, answer it!

Wait...the ringing's stopped.

Thank goodness, the ringing's stopped.

Maybe I should call her back.

What if she's sorry about last night?

What if she's not seeing anybody?

What if..?

*ring*

NO! The ringing's started again!

Fine, I'll answer it!

"Hello?"


"Sayu?"

"What do you want?"

"Can we talk?"

"I don't want to."

"Please? I need to tell you something."

"Why?"

"It's important."

"How do I know you're not going to hurt me again?"

"Just trust me, OK?"

Trust.

The one thing that's been taken from me.


"Sayu?"

Should I trust her?

"Sayu? Are you there?"

"Okay, fine. When do you want to meet?"

"Tomorrow morning."

You didn't say anything else. I hung up the phone and went to sleep.

Should I trust you?

Please..if you do...

Don't hurt me again.
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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #75 on: August 10, 2008, 06:10:36 AM »
Awwww :OMG: :fainted: Poor Sayu and poor blue!!! Blue is starting to sound like Yossy to me. But maybe it's because of maverickpanda's fic. But I'm hoping it's Maki or something!!! :lol:

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #76 on: August 11, 2008, 12:14:38 AM »
sorry, wanted to do another last night and couldn't..also, where's KonaKaga where I need her? :P

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The next day...

Okay, where are you?

I've been waiting for you.

I've waited for you this morning, but you didn't show.

I've waited for you during lunch..still, you didn't show.

You didn't even call or message me telling me you weren't going to be here.

I knew it..I should have known.

I knew I should have never answered the phone last night.

I knew that you was going to hurt me again.

That's it!

When she comes here(if she comes here) or the next time she calls, I won't respond. No matter what.

I never want to see her or hear from her again.

I hope that...


"Sayu? Can I come in?"

"No!"

"Please? I need to talk to you."

"No!"

I forced the door open to see you upset, only to have your back turned to me.

Damn it, Sayu. Why are you doing this to me?

This is not what I want for you..for us.

"Please Sayu," I pleaded, "look at me."

"Why?" you asked, "so you could hurt me again?"

"No, that wasn't it."

"Then what?"

"About what happened the night before."

"You mean about your girlfriend?"

"Will you stop it? I told you I don't have one."

"Prove it."

"What do you want me to do?"

"I don't want you to. What gives you the right to--"

That was when she kissed me.


That was when I kissed her.

It felt so good.

It felt so good.

I don't know how long it lasted, but for that moment, it made all my troubles with you wash away.

After it was over, you gave me a brief kiss, smiled, and walked away.

Not before you motioned to me that you would call me tonight.

I'm so in love with her right now.


I'm so in love with her right now.

Why didn't I do this sooner?

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #77 on: August 11, 2008, 12:32:08 AM »
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sorry, wanted to do another last night and couldn't..also, where's KonaKaga where I need her? :P
Right here XD Sorry that I didn't review the previous chapter! I just couldn't think of anything to say that might help :sweatdrop: I shall try my best!

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The next day...

Okay, where are you?

I've been waiting for you.

I've waited for you this morning, but you didn't show.

I've waited for you during lunch..still, you didn't show.

You didn't even call or message me telling me you weren't going to be here.

I knew it..I should have known.

I knew I should have never answered the phone last night.

I knew that you was going to hurt me again.
I can see Sayu's heart breaking right in front of me but I can't do anything! :cry: Ganbatte, Sayu!

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That's it!

When she comes here(if she comes here) or the next time she calls, I won't respond. No matter what.

I never want to see her or hear from her again.
Sayu's hearts so broken that it's making her judgemental/impatient...D:

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I hope that...

"Sayu? Can I come in?"

"No!"

"Please? I need to talk to you."

"No!"

I forced the door open to see you upset, only to have your back turned to me.
Usually don't people just walk away from the door rather than opening it?
I guess Sayu really is confused :P

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Damn it, Sayu. Why are you doing this to me?

This is not what I want for you..for us.

"Please Sayu," I pleaded, "look at me."
Huh? Why is blue begging for Sayu to look at her? I thought that blue was turned away. Does that mean blue turned around and Sayu is hanging her head?

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"Why?" you asked, "so you could hurt me again?"
Sayu, your saying that too much lately, don't make it a habit!

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"No, that wasn't it."

"Then what?"

"About what happened the night before."

"You mean about your girlfriend?"

"Will you stop it? I told you I don't have one."

"Prove it."

"What do you want me to do?"

"I don't want you to. What gives you the right to--"

That was when she kissed me.


That was when I kissed her.
It's about damn time! XD

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It felt so good.

It felt so good.
I'm sure it did. It felt so good to read this. Sayu's problems may be nearing an end.

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I don't know how long it lasted, but for that moment, it made all my troubles with you wash away.

After it was over, you gave me a brief kiss, smiled, and walked away.

Not before you motioned to me that you would call me tonight.

I'm so in love with her right now.


I'm so in love with her right now.

Why didn't I do this sooner?

Why didn't you do it sooner, blue? Running away from feelings maybe? Life is only once, so don't waste once-in-a-lifetime chances!

Oh, just something I spotted about the last chapter!
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"Okay, fine. Where do you want to meet?"

"Tomorrow morning."

Sayu asks where and blue replies a time O_o

Ever since I started reviewing this story I feel like I've sort of become a philosopher type of person saying lots of phrases  :sweatdrop: I wonder if that's a bad thing?
I await for the update and to find out who blue is!


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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #78 on: August 11, 2008, 02:55:00 AM »
OOOOOH! They kissed!! And they liked it! Blue, reveal yourself!!! :lol:

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Re: Acceptance
« Reply #79 on: August 11, 2008, 11:18:06 PM »
Wow...

I mean..WOW.

I really wished I'd done this sooner.

But..I really wished she kissed me back.

I know she didn't give me a complete kiss, but I wonder what it would be like?

I can't wait to call her.


* * * * * * * *

WOW...

She really knows how to kiss someone.

Wait, don't think that, Sayu.

You have to do something.

You have to make her yours and only yours.

I can't wait for her to call me tonight.

I wish I kissed her back..she really is a great kisser.

I wish I can kiss someone like that.

Wait, she can teach you.

Sayu...what is going on in that head of yours?


"Sayu?"

"Oh, sorry Ai-chan. I'll be out in a minute."

"Sayu? Can I talk to you for a second?"

"We gotta finish our rehearsals for the song. It's just one more routine."

Me and Gaki-san watched our leader leave before we walked out my dressing room together.

"Gaki-san?" I asked.


"What is it?"

"I'm sorry."

"For what? You didn't do anything wrong."

"I was jealous of you and Kamei-chan being together."

I could feel Gaki-san's arms hugging me as we continued to walk towards the rehearsal room. However, I could still see that Gaki-san is still hurt about something. "What's wrong?" I asked.


"I still have to tell you what happened," she said.

"Don't worry about it now," I said.

"I have to ask..who came in just now?"

"It's a secret."

"Don't worry. I won't pry into it."

So, Sayu has a secret?

Wait, I know someone who had a secret before.

However, she never told me about it...or about that person.

Until I found out about it too late.

I hate to say it, but it was all her fault..and I thought she was my friend.

But I'm not mad at Sayu. I never was.

I hope she and this person fall in love..and hopefully neither of them get hurt.

Like I was long ago.




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