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Offline Teppen Tottande

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Delusions (SayaMilky) Prologue 03/30
« on: March 30, 2013, 02:01:53 PM »
I'm sorry if this was done awfully. OTL This is my first attempt of writing a SayaMilky in awhile (even though the prologue's only Sayanee) so I hope you'd forgive me. Ehehehe~

Please tell me what you think without holding back after you read! And if there are any mistakes, feel free to point it out! Or rather, please point it out. orz



Prologue

Her breathing had already become audible as she continued on dragging her feet forward, running as fast as she could from the three figures after her, the black, wet school shoes she wore digging through the thick snow piled up on the ground, lessening her pace and making her attempt of escape even more difficult that she expected it to be. She took a glance behind her. A smirk. The three girls clad in the same uniform she wore had smirks on as they tailed her around, as if they were hungry tigers off to catch their prey.

Swallowing as hard as she could, Yamamoto Sayaka locked her attention in front of her once more, hurriedly turning to the corner the moment she neared it. A silent curse escaped from her lips, however, as her scarf unwrapped itself from her neck and fell, her feet which were once busy moving immediately halting on their tracks and turning on their balls. She reached her hand out for it while preparing herself to dash again once the red fabric would be within her grasp, but to her dismay, someone else’s hand grabbed it before she could. She looked up, only to meet someone’s fist followed by a sound of chuckle which probably came from her other two pursuers.

She fell down on the snow from the punch, her hand which she first held out for the said fabric now resting itself on her face as she scrunched her nose to see if it broke or not. Thankfully it didn’t. She then shot a glare up at the girl who stole her scarf.

“What’s this, what’s this? Little Sayaka’s angry that I got her expensive scarf? Aww…” The girl said with a cackle, giving one her posse a quick nod as she held her free hand out lazily, her palm facing up. Not a second later, a scissor was placed carefully above it. “I wonder how she would react if we… Oh, I don’t know, give it a quick re-designing?”

“Don’t you dare--!” Sayaka gritted her teeth and charged forward, only to have herself held back down to the cold snow by the other two girls.

“Don’t I dare what? Do… This?” With her grin widening, the girl held the scissor closer to the scarf and thoughtlessly cut it into two, dropping it to the ground after the other half had been cut off along with the silver scissor she used. With one last chuckle, she moved closer to Sayaka who was struggling to get off from her company’s’ hold, and placed her hand above the helpless girl’s head, messing her short jet-black hair as she whispered. “Weak.”

Ending the chase with that, the leader signed the two girls to let her go, quickly turning around and leaving behind Sayaka who, after all this time, had her eyes locked on the now cut-into-two scarf nestled by the snow-coated ground.



I'm sorry for any grammar mistakes and misspells, I'm not that familiar with english and my vocabulary's ultimately limited, so please do tell if you find anything icky/mistakes!

Thank you! ^___^

Offline Amakuchi

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Re: Delusions (SayaMilky) Prologue 03/30
« Reply #1 on: March 30, 2013, 03:24:16 PM »
AWESOME! CONTINUE THIS! BRAVO! *claps* I'm moved! TT ^ TT

NOBODY BULLIES SAYANEE LIKE THAT! D:<

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Re: Delusions (SayaMilky) Prologue 03/30
« Reply #2 on: March 30, 2013, 04:06:30 PM »
Do try a longer chapter next time, gambatte!  :twothumbs
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