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« on: December 31, 2006, 05:47:02 AM »
Im becoming slowly insane with the build up for stories in my head so I've made this little One Shot/Short series thread to let them out.

Please comment and be critical because Im also using this to reform my writing style.

I have added an index that I hope is user friendly.

Rating:
G (General)  -  Fun for everyone.
PG (Parental Guidance) - Minor Violence and such. Not good for those under 12
M  (Mature Audiences) - Mature themes, Slight Slashiness and such.
MA (Restricted to 15+) - Rather Mature. Heavy petting and controversial issues.
R (Restricted to 18+) - Hot and heavy. Sex or mass blood loss guaranteed!
X (Restricted to 18+) - Porn. I wont be using this rating here...








Index
Click on the titles to cut to the fiction!




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Great Balls of Fire
Rika x Miki
(Angst/Sadistic love/Cheap laughs) M




Any other way
Aya x Miki
(Strange Fluff) PG





Dirty Thrill
Aya x Miki
(Humour) G



For Crying out Loud
Rika x ???
(Sexual Comedy) MA



Free Time on Friday[/COLOR]
Mari x Maki
(Comedy) G



Going Commando
Part 1
Part 2
Part 3
Nono (And 4th Gen!)
(Humour) PG



Handcuffs
Reina x Maki
(Perv) R ...but really only MA



I dream of Aya
Aya x Yossui + Miki         (I blame this sentence of Love x2 feverXD God Im a lame ass)
(Comedy) M......MA-ish



Miki'd
Miki x Konno
(Comedy?) M



~Seishun~ A Story of Noisy Girls
Rika x Yossui
(Comedy) PG



Things that go Bump...
Part 1
Part 2
The True Story
Yossui x Miki
(Spooky) G



Too Close for Comfort...
Part 1
Part 2
Aya x Miki
(Comedy) PG



When it rains, it pours
Rika x Maki
(Angst) PG



Let me know if you can think of a better way to set up this index!!
I hope you enjoy looking through this confused Manderine brain of mine!
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« Reply #1 on: December 31, 2006, 06:09:17 AM »
Woo~! One shot thread~! <3

It looks like you tried an OTN1 style of writing in that one-shot. Personally, I really like how you wrote it, with Maki's thoughts being clearly spelt out and all, I would really like to see you pursue this direction of writing :]

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« Reply #2 on: December 31, 2006, 07:34:38 AM »
Rika Maki whoo!

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« Reply #3 on: December 31, 2006, 08:11:14 AM »
Title: Dirty Thrill
Pairing: Aya x Miki
Rating: G




Aya heaved a great big sigh. “I don’t know how you managed to con me into this”

”Well, you were a little intoxicated but a promise is a promise. I’m not letting you back out. I’ve waited so long for this moment”

Miki tied her hair back so it would get in the way of there fun.

”I’ve never done anything like this before!! And with good reason, Miki! I’m just not into this kind of thing. It’s…well…messy”

Aya’s voice was panicked and whiney. She backed up against the wall, looking helpless.

”How do you know you don’t like it if you haven’t tried it?” Miki grinned deviously “It’s a real rush, you might like it”

”No way mister! This is your sort of thing. You love all this weird, so called ‘thrilling’ - ”

”Bad luck Aya, we’re doing it”

Miki advanced upon the cowering soloist.

”No, Mikitty! I beg you please”

”Aww, come on! Aren’t you even going to co-operate?”

”No! I refuse to participate at all! I’m just going to stay here until you get bored and say sorry for suggesting me to do something so outrageous with you”

”So you’re not going to move?”

”Not an inch”

“Fine then. You’re ass is mine”

Miki flipped the protective visor forward before emptying round after round of paint filled pellets into her buddy.

”Well that was fun” She announced merrily, undressing herself of the armor that her paint covered friend failed to put on. Aya opened her eyes to a glare, the white standing out so vividly against the now blue skin.

”I. Hate. You. SO. Much”

”No you don’t” Miki extended her hand and pulled her friend up. “Now come on, let’s get you outta those clothes”
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« Reply #4 on: December 31, 2006, 06:19:27 PM »
Mikan, I love when you deceive us! :panda_love:
I liked "When it rains, it pours" for two reasons.
At first you don't know who is talking and it's a couple that is a bit unnusual.
But I prefered "Dirty Thrill" better! >.<
It's just my thing, but I love reading funny and quick-witted dialogues. As I said, I also like it when the story leads to one chain of reasoning but the truth is anything like it.
Nice work on both of it!
(ah.... that would be sooooo nice if I could also write in such diferent ways....)
I needed to put al least four letters... ¬¬'

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« Reply #5 on: December 31, 2006, 06:37:21 PM »
Yummy. I don't think I can really be critical with you, Mikan. You're style is truly unique!

Sounded like Miki was going to rape Aya there for a second. (Well, you can't really rape the willing, now can you? *cackle*)

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« Reply #6 on: January 01, 2007, 09:10:18 AM »
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Rika comes rushing back with track pants and a yellow Kellogs shirt.
Wait, how did Rika get Aya's shirt?


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”No! I refuse to participate at all! I’m just going to stay here until you get bored and say sorry for suggesting me to do something so outrageous with you”

”So you’re not going to move?”

”Not an inch”

“Fine then. You’re ass is mine”

Miki flipped the protective visor forward before emptying round after round of paint filled pellets into her buddy.

”Well that was fun” She announced merrily, undressing herself of the armor that her paint covered friend failed to put on. Aya opened her eyes to a glare, the white standing out so vividly against the now blue skin.

”I. Hate. You. SO. Much”

”No you don’t.”
:lol: That's great! Of course Miki would just be evil enough to take pleasure in completely saturating someone in paintball pellets.  :lol:


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Miki extended her hand and pulled her friend up. “Now come on, let’s get you outta those clothes”
Wouldn't be Miki if she didn't say that. :D

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« Reply #7 on: January 01, 2007, 12:02:49 PM »
Title: When it rains, it pours.
Pairing: Rika x Maki
Rating: PG (Minor, Minor, iddy biddy tiny bit of sexual content at the end)

I feel like a slob wearing such daggy jeans. But it doesn’t matter in the end. It’s raining and I don’t have my umbrella. I’m only wearing a shirt to protect myself from the cold. But like I said, it doesn’t matter in the end.

The icy rain drops soak my shirt and numb my brain. At first I tried not to care but now it’s getting too much. My body is shivering madly and I can feel water in my shoe. It’s like a miracle when I see her at the stop lights waiting.

I start to sprint over changing my pace to something slower on the approach. Inside I feel the need to surprise her. Her umbrella is enough for me to duck under without her noticing.

”Hey, Rika” My words startle her. She jumps, knocking my head with one of the prongs. Her eyes are large and round as she looks me up and down. I must have looked terrible. My face red and white from the winds, my shirt transparent.

 “Maki” Is all she says, as if confirming my identity. The lights change but we don’t walk.

”I got caught in the down pour” I tell her. It’s the half truth. The other part being that it was deliberate. I planned to get lost five districts away from my own and I planned to get wet. I felt like I needed it. I wanted to suffer just a little. I needed to feel a little more like myself. What I didn’t count on was running into anyone I know.

Rika says something to me but I don’t quiet catch it. Perhaps about being cold, or something. She takes my blank look as an affirmation and before I know it I’m being led down the street.

Rika’s house is nice. Warm above all. She takes me upstairs to her room which I can only describe as a pink explosion. She hands me a towel from the back of the door and runs off to another room with a promise of only being a moment. I dry my hair in her absence while having a look at the different photos pinned up on the mirror. Only a few of the people in them I recognize.

”I’m sorry, this is all I could find” Rika comes rushing back with track pants and a yellow Kellogs shirt.

”Thanks”

I put them on the study desk and stripped off my wet shirt and bra. I didn’t mean to be so straight forward but my actions seemed to startle her. She turned her back to me suddenly and began to clean up magazines that lay on the floor. I took my pants of and covered my top half with the Kellogs T-shirt. Argh. Even my underwear was wet. Before reaching for the track pants I waited for a moment, watching her, to see if she would turn around but she refused. I wondered if she was embarrassed or perhaps she was trying to give me confidence that she wasn’t looking. In a way it irritated me.

I forgot about getting dressed and approached her from behind. Scooping her under the arms and pulling her into me. She giggled, wobbling from side to side as she lost her balance. I let her go, letting her fall forward onto the bed with two hands before pushing her further, rolling her to face me and straddling her. She stopped giggling and her face became timid. I stroked her soft cheeks to relax her. It relaxed me some what too.

I felt her body loosen up underneath me and soon she started stroking my face in return. I felt so confused inside. This all felt so nice but why was I doing it? Why was I suddenly so impulsive? Where did I want this to go?

I didn’t know. I just wanted it.

I closed my eyes and covered her lips with my own. She embraced me fully.

That good feeling exploded from my heart and even if it was just faintly, I started to feel like myself again.
« Last Edit: January 17, 2007, 02:24:58 PM by Mikan »

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« Reply #8 on: January 02, 2007, 07:48:43 AM »
Paintball, heh heh

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« Reply #9 on: January 02, 2007, 09:36:18 PM »
Hmm... The only thing I'd really complain about is how you often end quotes without punctuation such as "Oh, she's going down" <--- needs a period after the 'down.' :<

But that's just me; if it's a part of your writing style, then you don't have to start incorporating it if you don't want to.

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« Reply #10 on: January 02, 2007, 09:51:38 PM »
I always thought the kellogs shirt was Yossui's... or Rika's.... I remember watching it on an interview show about someone not returning a yellow shirt and pants that someone let the other borrow until years later....

DAmmit Mikan, yet another awesome one. This may seem stupid, but I laughed mostly at
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”I. Hate. You. SO. Much”

”No you don’t” Miki
. Why? Because me and my bestfriend do that all the time... and it's usually me in Aya's situation XD

Rika and Maki?! for a second I thought it was another Reina and Maki... I guess I read it too quickly. Haha.... Maki was wet. She's always wet. *hugs Foxy Fungo*

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« Reply #11 on: January 02, 2007, 11:17:18 PM »
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I always thought the kellogs shirt was Yossui's... or Rika's.... I remember watching it on an interview show about someone not returning a yellow shirt and pants that someone let the other borrow until years later....
Dunno about that. I do know for sure that Aya wore a yellow "Kellogg's" shirt in her 1st Alo! Hello PB. Look:

EDIT -  Pic wasn't showing up, so I reposted it.

« Last Edit: January 03, 2007, 06:22:47 AM by JFC »

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« Reply #12 on: January 03, 2007, 06:18:26 AM »
Wow....Thats uh...a nice photo. I usually hate bikini shots.. For some reason I really like it...*steals*
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« Reply #13 on: January 03, 2007, 05:02:45 PM »
Title: Going Commando
Starring: Tsuji
Rating: G
Note: Not based on a true story I swear!!:P
Also the term 'Going Commando' is slang for wearing no underwear. It apparently comes from the army troops who went without underwear to "increase ventilation and reduce moisture"





It sounds complex and borderline impossible but trust me it, it isn’t! It starts off with being late. Your alarm goes off and you stumble out of bed. You strip yourself of pajamas and put on your day clothes. Starting with the bra and then the shirt and then the underwear. But… you realise you don’t have any left in your draw! Well, that’s ok because there should be some in the laundry. So you put your jeans on before leaving your room (people might see you!). And from your room you shuffle to the laundry, picking up your tooth brush along the way and brushing your teeth while you look. No luck, no under garments. Then you remember yesterday Mum did a heap of ironing so they could be in the living room. So you dash to the living room via kitchen but you're stopped.

"Your breakfast is ready. Quick eat it now. You’re late!"

In your haste you spit the toothpaste in the kitchen sink and begin cramming toast down your throat as fast as you can. Naturally you choke at first so you chase it down with milk straight out of the carton. Finding a clean glass seems to much of a hassle.

"Don’t drink out of the cartoon! It's unhygienic for others and don’t walk around while you’re eating! Sit down!"

You obey mother because you know it would be safer. You sit and you chew like there's no tomorrow. But then, your mobile rings. So you chase the sound around the house till you find your phone behind the fish tank.

"Hey! Where are you! You're late!" Your friend says.

"I know!"

You hang up and return to the kitchen but before you can...Dad stops you.

"Have you seen my keys?"

"No!"

"Alright then...Oh a taxi driver came to the door and said if you don’t come out in the next 5 minutes he's leaving without you"

You withhold your urge to curse and pretend to be civil.

"How long ago was this?"

"About 5 minutes ago…"

Then BANG! You shoot out that door and chase that damn taxi! And in a stroke of luck he hasn’t left yet. So you get inside and thank your lucky stars 'cause you made it.

But what you haven’t noticed is...

You're going commando.


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Come on, fess up! How many of you do/have done this?

The idea came to me at work (Yeh, Im a little under stimulated there) and I intend to make this a very very short series.

Yes, only Mikan could write about the horrors of no undies..
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« Reply #14 on: January 03, 2007, 08:46:32 PM »
LOL~! That happened to m once. And on the same day, I was wearing my pants backwards, and I didn't notice until I went to school that my pants were backwards, and THEN I noticed I wasn't wearing underwear.

And also, I thought I'd point out it says "it means wearing to underwear"
« Last Edit: January 04, 2007, 12:03:37 AM by Tanachan »
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« Reply #15 on: January 03, 2007, 10:04:02 PM »
Never been commando, I hate the thought.

And the rest of her day?

But that totally sounds like something Nono would do, lol.

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« Reply #16 on: January 04, 2007, 12:05:42 AM »
Hey, have you posted the "When it rains, it pours" story somewhere else before? I'm pretty sure I've read this before. Deja vu?

And yay for AyaMiki + paintball XD

I could never go out without underwear, ha! Never happend, never will!
Back in elementary school it happened a few times that I went to school in my houseslippers and in high school I wore a sweat shirt inside out for a whole day without realising it.

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« Reply #17 on: January 04, 2007, 01:59:56 AM »
Haha actually, I think I find it kinda hot when you're not wearing underwear (well for guys, its not....).

Its happened to me twice. once on vacation and instead of staying at my grandmothers mansion *well its 7 rooms... but its nothing like a fancy mansion* I stayed at my cousins house and forgot to pack underwear. :lol:
And its happened when I didnt do laundry on the weekend. Good thing I had some clean jeans :D

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« Reply #18 on: January 04, 2007, 03:55:52 AM »
Haha XD
All the stories are coming out!! yeah aparently about 7% of people go commando on a day to day basis. Those people claim benefits such as good circulation but the real reason is they find it sexual...

Thanks Tanachan for picking up the mistake! I read it hundreds of times but never pick it up (Im soooo shit tired atm)

Confession:
I was in primary school and I forgot to put on underwear (I was a very confused child)

Wearing your pants backwards? Now thats weird...Ive put em on like that but I notice straight away. There is a big Bum space near your crotch, didnt you notice :D

Rndm you gotta try it atleast once. They say women who sleep without undies have less change of getting some cervical thingy...

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Give it a shot....for Nono?
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« Reply #19 on: January 04, 2007, 06:23:48 AM »
I never looked down, sis! (long story behind the sis thing...)

Also, there's another weird fact I heard...Perofrming the act of fellation can reduce the risk of breast cancer by 40%
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