Why am I so excited?
…the dancer…
…the outsider…
…the broken one…
…the rebel…
…the prodigy…
…the flirt..
…the musician…
…and the one that started it all.
I know, 'cause it's a new story!
Ah, I miss this new fic when refreshing. After reading the prologue (at first I use interlude, I wonder what my mind is thinking) , I like how you made momo related to risako as a cousin :D
Love momo monologue. Please continue this! (of course, I'm one of the reader that vote for this, so I want you to continue! :D)
Berryz Koubou, Ikuzee!
kukukukukuku....*_*
So, you decided to go off and do a new story eh!?
WHO SAID YOU CAN START A NEW STORY WITHOUT WARNING ME!! *throws a very heavy tire at you, its kinda filthy too*
>_>.....but, its berryz...and it's new...and its shiny and sparkly (it kinda makes me jealous because I never sparkle and I'm never shiny)
So you best be updating often unless....you like being attacked by radioactive puppies! (I've ran out of radioactive kitties)
Not so much scolding today because I am sleepy and exhausted so you shall be spared today....
And because I am listening to such a happy, techno-y, up-beat, lovey dovey song I'll give you an apple (No sweets Today! You'll get cavaties!)
Must be quoted
hmmmm...this made me think who is who...87% of me says the outsider is Maiha...50% of the flirt goes to Miya but the other 50% says that miya could be the prodigy...
Damn you for making my brain work at this late of hour!! DAMN YOU!!...
I'll scold you when I have more energy.. T_T;;...
Until then, WORK FASTER, POST NEW CHAPTERS!! YAH!! YAH!!! MUSH!!! MUSH!!!
*Throws some film, retainers, rubberband balls at you*
>=3
p.s. = good job >_>....
Miya kinda fits the dancer too? Man why does she fit everything? :D
I wonder who's the broken one. Sounds so sad. From reading the prologue, it seems Momo was a performer too but gave it up? Am I right or did my lousy brain misunderstand something ???
So glad for this fic, especially since it starts off with Momo :heart:
ooh new fic! and it's about berryz! in an alternate universe!!! :)
I like the intro, and since it's in first person it feels more... personal? anyways it has a nice feel.
is momoko the broken one? or the outsider? I'm thinking she might be one of the two :p
“Visiting… a place like this? We don’t really get outsiders like you… What does your cousin do?”hint hint? :p
Though we were about the same size, she seemed to exude a sort of confidence and calmness from the very center of her being, which was something that I did not possess in the slightest.
“Shit…”
nice! didn't expect a new chapter this fast :D
hint hint? :p
Wow Chinami's a street magician! and I think Saki has some history with Risako..
I'm looking forward to see where this is going ^_^ good job!
>w<
Wahhh!! I, for some reason keep thinking Saki is going to kidnap Risako >_>
I don't know why, maybe its because I am playing FF9 again...
Hahaha, Saki said a bad word hahaha
I wonder if it really is bad that Chinami disappeared on Saki...hmm..must ponder and think..
Wah Chinami is a magician!!
Post faster, Post more, Post, post, post!!
or...*gives you the eyes of death*
You will find yourself sleeping next to roaches... %_%
I would like to comment and quote but...I've been uber sleepy lately...so..>_>
And...I also think, I've been too nice to you lately >_>...Giving you sweets and an apple..
so..ahem..fufufufufufu..
MUSH, WORK FASTER YOU BUM!!, WORK THAT BRAIN AND TYPE!!! TYPE 3 CHAPTERS PER NIGHT YOU WRITING MACHINE!! YAH!!
*Throws batteries at you*
KUKUKUKUKU!!!
FASTER YAH YAH!!!
*throws a live squid at you*
FASTER FASTER!
That is my captain :3
Don't tell me, you're going to follow loser87 examples?!
Nice, I like this easy-going fic. Go on Momo, keep exploring the world!
(sorry, felt to say that.. lol)
Sweet monkey babies! Loser 87 is mean.
I like what I see so far. I was wondering who "everyone's favorite Berry" was going to be, and it's Momoko, so, cool. Am I just imagining things or are there some hints of oddness afoot in the big city?
Oh........ so momo's the outsider. Seems like she's not going to have an easy time fitting in.
I was thinking about who Chinami and Saki might be. After pondering for the longest time, my guess is rebel for Chinami and musician for Saki. Am I close?
She threw her arms around my neck and hugged me so tight that I could almost feel the air being squeezed out of my lungs, and I was lifted slightly off of the ground. It’s not a pleasant feeling, should you ever be unfortunate enough to experience itif it was me, I wouldn't complain one bit ^_^
Oooo interesting, Risako the liar. XD Tricking Momo into coming to help replace Yurina. Poor Yurina, hurting herself...o_o; Miyabi sounds pretty bitchy here. XD
...I can't help but think of Kaleido Star here for some weird reason. Lol.
Should be interesting to see how practice goes later. :)
So, Risako, Miya and Yurina are originally the members of this group.
What can I say, Miya is really that evil :3
Hehe, Momo is the one that owns Gag. (well, in this case, the real universe :D)
Now, all I need is Maasa, Yurina and our beloved Maiha XD
Keep up the good work FIM! (trying to not throwing random thing :D )
I'm making this short because my internet is evil and I need to call the service later today to complain
HOORAY FOR NEW CHAPTER...FINALLY!
God It's so fun and cute, You need to update faster
There is no scolding for a while as I realized I have a pile of homework to finish and a crappy dsl line to fight with
Until then,
POST NEW CHAPTERS YAH!! *Throws a man at you*
Yay! Berryz! As long as you don't start writing about Cute.
Wow! momo's got spunk! I like it ^_^
and strict Takahashi as a troupe leader :heart: :heart:
if it was me, I wouldn't complain one bit ^_^
overall it's areally fun chapter to read :D keep it up ;)
The one called Maiha grinned. It was a facial expression that annoyed Maasa to no end. That crooked, wolfish, disarming smile that made girls swoon and fall at her feet. Well, girls other than Maasa, anyway. It just made her want to punch the other girl in the face.
Maiha the player! o_o; Lol. XD
Maasa being tough and not taking any crap huh? Is something wrong with Chinami cos Saki has to take care of her? o_o Hmm seems like a tough little city if that's what they're doing to survive. Hmm indeed.
Hmm Momo sure seems to attract a lot of attention. XD
More pwease. :P
But.. but... I love that smile! (:D) Yeah, actually your description doesn't sound bad all..
Heh, I'm surprised to know that Maasa and Maiha are from the street. Er, Maiha still a girl? (or a boy in this fic) lol..
Interesting... please continue... I still can't make out how they will coss each other paths....
Wow Maiha a player? Gotta visualize that ;D It seems loads of people are noticing Momo now. Who knows, she might become the new ace.
Wow, Maiha the player XDXD
Write more you writing slave WRITE!!
Hmm I do wonder what is up with Chinami that she has to be taken care of
Anyways, I COMMAND YOU WRITE FASTER YOU IMAGINATION PERSON THING!! O_O
*throws sushi at you*
Hurry up or NO FOOD FOR YOU!! >_>
O_o Miyabi the bitch. Tripping Yurina! Gah!
That girl who's been listening in on Yurina is Chinami, isn't it? Cos if something is wrong with Chinami, I gather that she's ill or something like that, so it kinda matches up.
Momo's definitely getting attached to the place, whether she likes it or not. Heh.
Can't wait to see how the rehearsal goes. I'm sure Miya will try to make life in the theater hell for Momo. XD
Wow Miyabi is...quite..how do I say this..Deviously evil?
I bet it was Chinami, my entire 78% of me says its Chinami who is the secret admirer =D
Ah, Berryz fics are so entertaining >w<
But that's so sweet >w<
About Yurina and Chinami *squeel* X3
Okay so i think I figured it out, but i think i got some of them wrong..
I put it in white just in case I do get some right and some people don't want it to be ruined and stuff..
Starts here:
Chinami is the broken one..
Momo the outsider...
Yurina is the Muscian
Maiha is the Flirt
Miyabi is the Prodigy
Maasa is the Rebel
Saki is the dancer
and Risako is the one that started it all
Anyway I <33 you my slave for updating quickly! I say Encore!! XD
Who said you can eat the sushi I fling at you!? I THREW THE SUSHI SO THEY'D HIT YOU!
<_< Note to self : Don't throw food at FIM she'll just eat it..
ahem..Now, MUSH AND TYPER FASTER YOU MONKEY!!
YAH YAH!!
*Throws a katamari at you!* o_o....I <33 Katamari
Now my slave MUSH! YAH!!!
Whenever I heard those words, I knew that I would be waiting a few hours before she got out of the shower. But it’s okay… I’m good at waiting. I can find things to focus on to keep me from getting bored.
This a beautiful chapter I must say. Because it's made of Yurina beautiful piece, her beauty self and your style of writing.. :heart:
Heh, that's Risako for you.
Oh my, so the devil tripped Yurina ? This evilness is another level than previous chapters.. My view about this Miyabi has changed.. :scolding:
Can't tell if you have enough sweetness already or you're going to be overdose unconsciously by it.. To describe this chapter. :heart:
Wow weeeeee so glad I checked. There's a new chapter. Wow I can't believe Loser87 got all right. I messed up 2 of them. I love Momo so I wish she would stay but poor Yurina. Unless maybe, she's gonna get to play the piano for good somehow :-\
Maasa had fallen through to the dining room the first time she had visited, and would never again go much farther than the doorway.
Maasa had fallen through to the dining room the first time she had visited, and would never again go much farther than the doorway.Haha, I laughed so very hard here XDXDXD
“I’m just saying… you and I and Chii-chan and Maihacchi all know that you’re innocent, but the police don’t, and they’ve still got it out for you around here. So just… be careful.”
I wonder… do you ever miss me… the way that I miss you?*clinging onto life...Refusing to die from cute overload...*
Lol Maasa.
Captain has a mysterious history... I wonder with whom she's in love... :3 Risako?
Double chapter always nice.. :D Thanks for the kindness :heart:
"The Loft" reminds me of Aladdin's home xD And I personally think who Saki's thinking about is none other than the bitchy Miyabi xD Those two have great chemistry in a way xD
Though I look forward to this dance routine that Momoko's suddenly a part of. I can't help but think of Munasawagi Scarlet because the center's on Miyabi and Momoko xD I wonder what Momo'll think once she finds out that in 'the fishy move' (You know what I'm talking about xD The head swishing and going down the other's leg), her partner for that move is Miyabi xD. I'd imagine Miyabi won't be too thrilled at that either, roffle xD
I like the characterization you put into Momoko. Inevitably, I can see that by the end of this story, she'll be a nicer person and more happy than emo xD
Ai as the instructor makes me giggle for some reason xD I can't really imagine her as a strict teacher, she's more of a nicer teacher in my image of her xD.
Makes me wonder how many more H!P cameos you intend to make :]
Keep up the good work! -gives you the obligatory and famous hardhat to protect yourself from Writer's Block-
gosh, they all pretty much live in crappy houses o_o
haha, I just realized the list you wrote out descended according to age order from oldest to youngest
Anyways, Chinami has episodes huh, now what happened that was so horrible that she'll have episodes like vietnam veteran hm..
I feel an obvious, SakiXMiyabi vibe going on >_>
But I want to bring my hopes up that high in case I'm wrong
But what I can do is squeel like a little girl because this story's romance vibe is just so damn adorable >w<
Haha, I laughed so very hard here XDXDXD
What is the reason for the police going after Maasa..
I'm guessing that she was obviously framed for a crime she didn't comitt..
*clinging onto life...Refusing to die from cute overload...*
Now, my slave Post faster!
MUSH YOU...You...you...*throws a water bottle at you* I have run out of clever or silly name callings for you!
POST!!TYPE!!BE THE FIC!! o_o....dude, scratch that last part <_<
Me senses Saki/Miyabi vibes too. XD
Is Chinami suffering from a...mental condition? So to speak, anyway...hmm.
Lol @ Maasa falling through the floor. XD
Anyway, write more soon. :P
Risako’s the kind of person that would hug you even if you held a gun to her head and told her not to
I might as well just pause for a moment to tell you that I am what some people define as being ‘touch-phobic’. I don’t like it when other people touch me, and I keep my hands to myself. The only person I even tolerate coming within my personal bubble is Risako, and even she still makes me twitch sometimes. Plus, the only reason for it is because Risako’s the kind of person that would hug you even if you held a gun to her head and told her not to, so basically I couldn’t stop her from doing it anyway.
So this was going to be VERY unpleasant for me.
That made me grin. XD
Ahhh, Momo and Miyabi tension UPPPPPPP!!!! *does a happy dance* *trips and falls flat on face* XD Not very graceful here. Hahaha you really have it in for Momo...putting her in that place...XD I can't wait to see more. ^_^
I keep imagining one of them is going to start something and have an all out brawl XDXD
XDXD
God, I love this story and of course I love VoA <333
Update my silly writer!!
XD
*Stares at you*
O_O
Update...
O_O
:D
This is going into a war zone! This rivalry is scary..
Hmm, why I forgot about :heart: Captain x Miya :heart: like in real life.. So, it's not Risako? XD
Hmm, end of idea. Thank for this chapter! Dunno what to say anymore -_-"
Btw, be careful with the storm! Better offline than getting a fried modem :D
"Sudou… Maasa.”
“See, that wasn’t so hard.”
“Saki never told me that you were so damn annoying.”
“Am I? I really thought I was just being polite.”
“Whatever. Weird’s a better word for it.”
“Why is that?”
“Because normal people don’t try to make friends with people that put them in a headlock.”
“…are you implying that we’re friends now?”
“Why would I want to be friends with you?”
“Why wouldn’t you?”
“Because you’re annoying.”
“Oh? I thought I was weird.”
Wahh!! >w<
I'm sort of glad you have a sort of writers block on the other story at the same time I kinda don't you know?
I demand YuriXChii Wuv!! =w=!!
Maasa is...sort of....How do I say this, hmm..."Grr Arghh!"
That's the best I can describe her right now lol XDXD
XDXDXDXD
P.S. - Stop copying my evil and devious ways! Get your own ways of prodding me!!
O_O
UPDATE~
Woo, I'm behind on my reading :p stupid school...
Wow so Chinami's like that because she's got some kind of mental illness? aww >_< good thing Captain is there for her. wonder what caused it? I think she's a dancer too before, right? maybe something happened when she's performing or something? O_o
I'm loving the Miya x Momo rivalry even more ^_^ however I can't help but to think that something's going to go wrong on their actual performance :(
Great updates! thanks! :)
Hah I knew it, a mental illness. Poor Chinami. Let's hope Momo and Maasa can find her!
-sits around and waits- XD
So much to read! ChinamixYurina SakixMiya MomoxMaasa. But you put a Cute in there! Umeda's Cute, right? I swore that I would never be interested in any of the Kid's groups and I broke that with memorizing the Berryz. I can't do it anymore! I can't tell the Cute girls apart at all! It isn't fair! *sob*
*sob*
*sob*
*...*
Okay, you're going to update again soon, right?
Heh, another annoying morning for Momo.. :D
Liking all the details.
Momo sure not a morning person.
Urgh, Maasa is a wrestler or something? lol. Momo is so brave to slap Maasa. She can kills you know!
Lol, Chinami ran away again.
Nice chapter FIM!
Double-update because I won't let my master show me up! -shakefist-Haha, poor, poor slave of mine!
And with her troupe… only the absolute best were accepted. Already, she was one of the weaker performers, and she had a feeling that after she recooperated completely… chances of still having a place at the theater were slim
“Why do you always hide from me…? Am I ever going to get to see you?”
“…Probably not.”
“Are you afraid of me?”
“…It’s more like… the other way around.”
Yurina was puzzled. “But I’m not afraid of you…”
“I know. I want it to stay that way.”
“I bet it’s not as bad as you make it out to be…”
“People are scared of me because they think I’m crazy. Somehow they assume that… just by looking at me. I don’t want you to see what they see.”
Risako had caught up to me by this point, and as soon as she saw Maasa, she started to freak out just a little bit. And by that, I mean that she picked up this board that was leaning against the dumpster in the alleyway, and started waving it around like a maniac.
“Alright you big bully, back off! I got this piece of wood and… well… I don’t know karate or anything like that but I’ll kick your butt if you hurt Momo-chan.”
“Look, that doesn’t matter, though. You’re right in that we should probably tell Shimizu-san what happened.”
“What do you mean we?”
“Um… wait, Shimizu?” Risako had dropped the board, and she was now very interested in the conversation.
“Yeah, why?”
“Well… I used to know a girl with that name…”
“So?”
“So, she’s the reason why Miyabi’s such a bitch.”
She didn’t stop to watch the people performing on the street, because she thought they were beneath her and it was a waste of her time
A small crowd had gathered around a girl who was dancing to some frantic, unknown rhythm that only she seemed to be able to hear. Her moves were complex, intricate, and fluid, and impossible for anyone else to repeat.
And in that moment, when Miyabi recognized just who that girl was…
She could have sworn that her heart almost stopped beating.
“So, she’s the reason why Miyabi’s such a bitch.”
Jeez, you are fast! ChinamixYurina is (young, so young) <3
Aha! Saki/Miyabi! Risako thinks that Saki's the reason Miyabi's so bitchy now? Ooooh how interesting. XD I have a few inklings why that is so (I watch too many of this kind of anime and dramas ^^;) but I won't spoil it for the rest. XD
Yurina and Chinami make such a cute pair. I think Yurina's music has a kind of a healing, or at least a calming effect on Chinami. It should be cool when they finally get to really know each other.
Now I wonder what Miyabi's going to do to Saki. XD *hopes for pairing-ness eventually* XD
First off, You almost killed me...
This is by far one of my fav. chapters by far!
I of course love all of your chapters and stories but this one in particular just building up the tension and anticipation!
I can not wait for the 9th chapter >w<
2nd of all, Haha, poor, poor slave of mine!
You can't beat me when it comes to updating, I am the queen of chapter related updates BUAHAHAA!!
I bet you haven't written out Chapter 9 yet did you?
fufufufufu, silly slave I HAVE AN ARSENAL OF CHAPTERS JUST WAITING TO BE POSTED KUKUKUKUKU!!!!
*in the best clint eastwood voice i can impersonate* I dare you to challenge me, come on make my day XDXDXD
Now time to quote your lovely chapter!
;+; Poor Yurina!! *hugs kumakuma* >w<
*Sigh* ChiiXYuri wuv is sure gonna be hard with their situation...>w<
It almost feels like Romeo and Juliet when they first met...I just hope they don't end in a tragic way like Romeo and Juliet >_O
OMG I almost died laughing!! XDXDXDXD
My slave, I love your sense of humor haha
You brought me to tears, my sides hurt now ah~
=O
This is exactly why I can't wait for your next chapter, the anticipation is making me kinda want to ditch school just so I can see if you updated or not >w<
I wanna know what happens!!
Hmm, I also wonder...
What will happen if Maiha met Momoko...
I do wonder what goes on in that imaginative head of yours >_>
Well, isn't Miyabi quite the stuck up >_>
You best make the next chapter good to make her into such a...female dog..(Refraining from using bad words, not very cute XD)
Because Miyabi is one of my fav. Berryz Member so you better have good reason!! *twirls around my crowbar in a threatening manner* O_O
Wow, Captain took Maasa's advice wow XD
But...This just tore me up and made me squeel like a silly little fangirl
I wonder, I wonder what captain and miya will do
A part of me says Captain will run away but another part says they'll probably argue =T
*sigh* I guess I'll have to sit put and wait =+=''
This is the longest comment I have ever done..
Appreciate it you nincompoop!
P.S. I will be updating very early, perhaps around 4:30 a.m. when I wake up for school, assuming my internet won't die and if it does die I'll double post again!!
TAKE THAT MY SLAVE FUFUFUFUFUFUFUFU!!! :hiakhiakhiak: :hiakhiakhiak:
Until then I bid adeu :byebye:
I feel the urge to illustrate some scenes manga-style XD
-can't wait for the Captain x Miyabi scene -
And shit, I missed a wedge xD Oh well, my wedges are often one in ten xD
Every time I read Yurina's part, you always put a beautiful wording for her (even if you don't, I always think like that :D) .. Omg, I'm mesmerized! I don't want she thinking about all that what will happens if she don't recover -_-" Wow, Chinami does know Yurina? She seem normal now with all the conversation.
Lol.
Urgh, it's nearly there!
Omg, the chapter ends! -_-"
One of the best berryz fics out there. Nice character portrayal, and an interesting storyline that keeps me reading.
I guess Saki was one of the better dancers of the troupe but she quit to take care of Chinami and Miya is angry at her for quitting her dreams?
Oooooooooohhhhhhhhh so Miya's so erm.... hard to get along (I shall not use the other suitable word :lol:) is cuz of Saki? Wow didn't expect that. So they are one pairing, Chi/Yurina, maybe Momo/Maasa. That leaves Risako/Maiha? :glasses:
I think your writing skills are awesome, I can feel every character. If only this was a real production with the Berryz acting *dreams* :sleep:
You've been very busy lately, it seems. I'm liking how the story progresses, although I don't really know where it's going. It's all interesting, mostly because of the setting.
Keep it coming, I bet it's bound to get better.
“Don’t use such language, Risako. You’re too young and it’s not adorable.” Only I could call Natsuyaki that, and even then, it was only in my mind.XDXDXD Hahaha XDXDXD
“♪I am sixteen, going on-♪”
Maasa clapped a hand over her mouth, very irked at this point. Between the two of us, my cousin and I could be a bit much for just one person to handle…
“-Seventeen, yes, now if you’re done, could we get back to the important stuff? Like how Chinami is wandering the streets alone, and we need to go and tell Saki like, now? And for everything else… I suggest you ask Saki herself about it rather than finding it out from this kid.”
“I’ll do it.”
It was a voice that she had not heard in a very long time, though it was tainted by a bitter sort of tone. The voice’s owner stepped up onto the makeshift stage, and the dancer felt her throat get very, very dry.
She couldn’t read what was there in Miyabi’s blank eyes, and that sent a shiver down her spine. This could not be good. The other girl said nothing to her, however, and seemed to be waiting for Saki to start
Though the smaller girl wanted so very badly to just collapse against the other right then and there. Saki was panting heavily as she looked up into Miyabi’s eyes.That just did it for me
Those very, very angry eyes.
Say something to me, anything… please. Scream at me for being so stupid… for disappearing… for being here under your nose the whole time… for showing up here and now without any warning at all… anything… just speak to me…
And then the rug was pulled right out from underneath her. Miyabi merely turned around at that point and began to walk away, sliding past the bewildered members of the crowd with ease.
Not a single word.
Not even one last backwards glance.
Nothing had ever hurt so much before. At this point, she felt as though she could have been run down with a bulldozer and even that wouldn’t be able to compare.
The crowd had started to disperse, figuring out that the show was over for the day. But she didn’t care. She barely even noticed when she was all alone again, standing there on that wooden stage.
It’s so cold outside today…
“♪I am sixteen, going on-♪”
I’m doing this for Chinami.
There isn’t any other way, just like Maasa pointed out.
We can’t rely on everybody else forever.
They hadn’t needed emcee’s back then. They had Saki.
“I’ll do it.”
Those very, very angry eyes.
Nothing had ever hurt so much before. At this point, she felt as though she could have been run down with a bulldozer and even that wouldn’t be able to compare.
Oh GAAAAAAAAAH. *tears hair out*
Omg, Saki has to make up with Miyabi immediately. Because it's better for both of them. But I know you won't let them do anything for now, because I know well enough that you would probably be evil enough to prolong their angst. I know I would if I were in your position. :P
Now I can't wait to see what's next. XD
;_;....
That just mauled my heart around like a rabies infested dog...
Oh gosh, That was so worth the reading >_<
I <33 YOU!!
Even if you're my slave >_>
*kicks your shins just for the sake of our Master-slave relationship*
QUOTES!!
XDXDXD Hahaha XDXDXD
Ah, So they are older in this story so that would make Momoko and Saki 19 and the others 18, and Yurina 17 ne?
Outch, Outch, Outch...;+;
That just did it for me
Like, wow...
I am at a loss for words
Just wow
;+;
One day, maybe perhaps you'll surpass me in updating MAYBE
You have a long way to go in the art of updating young grasshopper!
BUAHAHA!!
;+;
My heart feels mushy and pully thanks to this but it was worth it..
NOW GET BACK TO SLAVING YOU NINCOMPOOP!! YAH!! *Cracks Whip*
Ah ha, so Saki did hurt Miyabi in the past to the extent of Miyabi gaining a bitchy persona xD Guessing Saki's feeling really guilty because of it. Aww :< -hugs-
As for the manga thing, I might only do it in scenes I think are perfect to draw rather than entire chapters xD So don't expect much from me xD! Here and there, I might do splash images too xD!
-pats your hardhat to make sure it's working great-
Hehe, Risako.
Captain, ganbare!
@_@ , that is the Little Captain @_@
OMG!
...
Damn.. It hurt so much.. Urgh, my heart..
Hmm, what can I say. This chapter is really melancholic.
Thanks for the fast update.. I really can't keep up with both of you and loser87 fics, lol..
EDIT - Urghh, forgot to comment about your drawing... It's cute and awesome!
But then I sadly reminded myself that this was not my home anyway.
I am an outsider. And this is temporary
She was grinning in a devious sort of way, and was very much all up in my personal space. Again, as I have told you before, I am not fond of other people touching me, and thus I didn’t quite know how to react at first.
Because I was stunned, the girl only grinned wider and slid her arm around my waist, closing the gap between us.
And when she began to talk, she wasveryclosetomyfaceandIdidn’tknowwhattodo.
“Hey there, gorgeous. I don’t think I’ve ever seen you around here. Which means that you’ve been missing out on the greatness that is Ishimura Maiha.”
“MAIHA, I AM GOING TO KILL YOU!”
The reply to that came from both Maasa and Risako, and both the girl who was holding me (I was flustered at the time, so I didn’t really notice it at first, but her hands were wandering a bit too low for my comfort.) and I turned to look at them, confused.
“If by miss, you mean that I’ve been enjoying every moment that I don’t have to see your face, then yeah.”
“Ouch, I’ve heard that one before, too. But no big deal, I know how I can make it all up to you.”
“They know about Saki, stupid. This girl here-” She gestured to me in a indifferent matter, “-met her yesterday, and I know that Sugaya wasn’t supposed to find out but that happened, too. The secret’s out. All that aside, the last thing I want to do is be around you and your crap right now. Plus, I think you just broke Momoko, idiot. She’s not from around here, and she’s not used to people like you. So don’t touch her again.”
She used my name. From what I had picked up, Maasa didn’t seem to call people by their first name very much. Just Saki. I wasn’t sure what that meant. It was kind of nice that she was scolding the lecherous newcomer for me, though.
“Oh? Is that so? Or is there more to it than that? You sound awfully protective, Maa-chan.”
Maiha was still wearing that charming grin of hers when she turned back around to face Risako, and before my cousin could do anything about it, the weasel leaned forward to plant a gentle kiss on her cheek before darting back out of reach and away from us. My guess was that she didn’t want to get killed. I was still really confused at this point, so I actually wasn’t that sure.The two rabbits had/have a fling do they?
My cousin seemed stunned, and she touched her face lightly, and for a moment, I thought she smiled maybe just a little bit.
“Everybody, I’ve got bad news! Takahashi-san’s in the hospital! She got hit by a car!!”
The two rabbits had/have a fling do they?
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Please oh please more XD
......XDXDXDXDXDXDXD Oh jesus on a cracker, I laughed hard and I don't know why XDXDXDXD
All in all, I love it
I love the sudden change in atmosphere from chapter 9's to chapter 10's
You rock mah socks yo~
*kicks you again, for the sake of our master-slave relationship*
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I freaking love Maiha. xD Miki Jr.! xD
OHNOOHNOOHNOOHNO AAAAAIIII ;_______;!!!! I wonder who her replacement teacher will be. o_o
Loser87! You're not supposed stare in massive quantity! It's quality!
O_O...
Maiha!!! XD I love shameless flirts. XD
o_O You let Ai get hit by a car. o_o;;;; WHY?! -shakes you-
Now write faster!!
And then… Natsuyaki started cracking up. Hard. At first it was just a series of little giggles and then she completely and totally lost it, erupting into a fit of cackles and mad laughter. She even dropped to the floor at one point, clutching her sides as she continued with her hysterics.
…I failed to see what was so funny.
“We keep going. We practice hard for nine more days and then we give the people in this city a show they’ll never forget.”Motivational and inspriational =O
“Are you out of your mind?” Naturally, Natsuyaki would be the one to oppose me. “Our routines were written for a group of seven, not four.”
“Then we’ll make up new ones.”
“You’ve got to be kidding me. They won’t work for the songs we’ve got anymore.”
“Then we’ll get new songs, too.”
“Now I KNOW you’re crazy. None of us write music or play instruments. And we don’t have the money to go out and buy the rights to anyone else’s stuff. So yeah, you’re crazy.”
No. I’m a genius. I promise. Risako’s not the only one in our family that is. I turned to her, this great plan carrying itself out in my mind.
“Yurina writes her own songs, right? Lyrics and music, right?”
“Well, yeah, but-”
“Do you think she could write some stuff for the theatre before the performance? And perhaps play for it as well?”
“It’s possible, but… Momo-chan, I don’t feel comfortable asking so much of her.”
I grinned and walked over to Risako, putting my hands on her shoulders so that I was… well, somewhat level with her.
She was regarding me now with a look that wasn’t as bitter as it had been last night. There was something like curiousity there… and perhaps maybe… just maybe… I had impressed her a little bit, and earned some of her respect
But I'm kind of emotional right now, and I decided to get this down while it was still in my head.;+;....What's up my slave?
For one thing, she really hadn’t wanted to leave the musician’s house at first, and long after the other girl has assumed she was gone, Chinami had spent her time resting contentedly up in the tree next to the house. Sure, she had felt bad for ditching both Saki and Maasa, but…
She wouldn’t do anything else to strike such terror into her friend ever again. She promised this to herself. The frightening aspect of it was though, could she get ALL of herself to promise? Some of the others had trouble agreeing at times… Arguing amongst themselves like that… clouding her mind…
Saki was crying. She was crying a lot. But Saki never cried.
This greatly distressed Chinami, who was already confused most of the time anyway. She automatically assumed that the tears were her fault somehow, and she managed to clumsily pull the other female in towards her, hugging her to the best of her ability.
“I’m sorry, Captain.” She whispered, but the other girl only continued to cry, however comforted by her friend’s embrace. “For everything… all the time… you know…?”
Still nothing. In fact, she thought that maybe Saki was crying harder now.
“Please don’t hate me, Captain…”
That got Saki’s attention. “No… never… I’ll never hate you. Ever. I promise. Do you understand?” Her voice broke with every other word, and it was strained with tears, but Chinami believed her completely and nodded, burying her face into the other girl’s shoulder.
Saki managed to choke back the rest of the sobs that threatened to come, and lay there quietly for a moment, until she felt the other female relax against her body as sleep claimed her.
Thank goodness… heaven knows she needs to rest for once…
This had been a moment of weakness. She would have to be stronger in the future. But it was so hard, and she was no Maasa. She couldn’t turn her heart into ice at will like that… And she didn’t really want to. The small girl let out a sigh, closing her eyes as the moonlight flooded in through the holes in the ceiling.
Maybe I should just forget all about you… Especially if I want to survive.
…But won’t that tear up my heart even more?
The reply to that came from both Maasa and Risako, and both the girl who was holding me (I was flustered at the time, so I didn’t really notice it at first, but her hands were wandering a bit too low for my comfort.) and I turned to look at them, confused.
".. the weasel leaned forward to plant a gentle kiss on her cheek.."
My cousin seemed stunned, and she touched her face lightly, and for a moment, I thought she smiled maybe just a little bit.
“Everybody, I’ve got bad news! Takahashi-san’s in the hospital! She got hit by a car!!”
And then… Natsuyaki started cracking up. Hard. At first it was just a series of little giggles and then she completely and totally lost it, erupting into a fit of cackles and mad laughter. She even dropped to the floor at one point, clutching her sides as she continued with her hysterics.
..I giggled a little bit just then..
..“Alright, so… we’re out then.” ..
I turned to our resident evil girl.
The show must go on.
She wouldn’t do anything else to strike such terror into her friend ever again. She promised this to herself. The frightening aspect of it was though, could she get ALL of herself to promise? Some of the others had trouble agreeing at times… Arguing amongst themselves like that… clouding her mind…
She could see the smaller female’s silhouette curled up in the makeshift bed of rags and coats with what bleary vision she had left at this hour of the day, and she sluggishly made her wobbly way over to Saki as best as she could. Once she was there, she crawled in beside the other girl, and because of the effort that had been made, she had to pause and rest again.
That got Saki’s attention. “No… never… I’ll never hate you. Ever. I promise. Do you understand?” Her voice broke with every other word, and it was strained with tears, but Chinami believed her completely and nodded, burying her face into the other girl’s shoulder.
…But won’t that tear up my heart even more?
Argh you really like angst. Sigh. Poor Saki.
And I think I understand what's wrong with Chinami now. Hmm. Poor girl.
Anyway, update more~~
DAMMIT DAMMIT DAMMIT DAMMIT!!
DAMN YOU!
Now I know I'm going to spend half the night trying to write out as many chapters as I can just so you don't beat me
DAMMIT!!!
but no worries, despite my little 'dammit' outbursts, I'm not that worried..I'll probably will beat you in updating..I'll make sure of it >w<
QUOTES!!
;+;....What's up my slave?
Rabu...It's rabu for sure >w< <333
hmm..a schizophrenic or split/multi-personality? just guessing..
curious, but i <3 crazy Chinami *huggles*
So sweet ;+;
Miya must have hurt Saki like...a twisted child hurts wounded animals o_o
*huggles captain too * >w<
I just have to know...I want the relationships, it's there but theres so much conflict!
It's driving me insane!
I gotta know what happens next I GOTTA! O_O
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*kicks you again*
All in the name of our Master-Slave relationship!! >;P
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Yes YESSS YESSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!! No more 3 other girls so that means it's open for the rest of the Berryz!! You're a GENIUS Momo. That and I love you ;D And you too, you wonderful author :D
Why do I sense Miyabi turning nice after this whole episode? Keep up the good work ^^
I was about to be very, very pissed off. An annoying rapping noise had been persisting at Risako’s apartment window for the past few minutes or so, and my patience was wearing thin. At first, I had decided to just ignore it, in the hopes that it was some freak thing and that it would go away, but it only just got louder.
Finally, I rolled over in the bed, opening my eyes to view the blurred numbers on Risako’s alarm clock. They screamed “3:25A.M.” brightly at me, burning their image into my mind.
Someone is going to die.
She recovered quickly, however, and I suspected that this wasn’t the first time someone had hit her like that.
“Holy crap that hurt… What’s your problem?”
Don’t. Say. A. Word.”XDXDXDXDXD
“I’m guessing that Sugaya wasn’t as excited to see you tonight as you thought she’d be, hm?”
“No, actually… I didn’t see her. The other girl… she came out instead and thus my stomach became very familiar with her fist. I don’t think she liked being disturbed… Man… she hits harder than Risako…”
Maasa couldn’t help but grin at this. The next time she saw that Momoko girl she was going to have to shake her hand.
Just because I don’t wear my heart on my sleeve like the others doesn’t mean that it’s not there.
Maybe it’d be easier if it really wasn’t there.
Then maybe, the little stuff like this wouldn’t bother me.
I was about to be very, very pissed off.
She could sleep through anything, that girl.
She grinned in that perverted way, nevertheless.
If you ever wake me up at three o’ clock in the morning ever again, I will -kill- you.
You don’t dare wake Tsugunaga Momoko up before she’s good and ready unless you have a death wish.
Maasa couldn’t help but grin at this. The next time she saw that Momoko girl she was going to have to shake her hand. Wait, next time? Who said there was going to be a next time?
“Says the girl who’s never been in a relationship and wouldn’t have any idea.”
Just because I don’t wear my heart on my sleeve like the others doesn’t mean that it’s not there.
Maybe it’d be easier if it really wasn’t there.
Then maybe, the little stuff like this wouldn’t bother me.
Hmm, so it seems that Risako and Maiha have been in a relationship before. Seeing their interaction thus far, they broke up and now Maiha's trying to win Risako back? xD
Love moody Momoki without sleep xD! I'd hate to wake her up, but I wouldn't mind her punching me xD
Maasa is an intriguing character here. She's one of the "tough nut to crack" characters that don't open up so easily like the others xD I wonder who eventually does make her open about herself xD
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-FIM snipped out the godforsaken scary face that was here before-
Now, why would Maiha want Risako to come out hmm?? *french accent* Ohohohohohohoho!! 'tiis love no?
I've become slow Damn! >_<
But I'll catch up I'll make sure of it!
QUOTES!!
*sigh* Thats me in the morning, irritated, annoyed, moody, and waiting to kill someone
I <33 grumpy-evil-not-a-morning-person Momoko >w<
Well, flirts certainly do get hurt more >_>
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*sigh* poor Maasa ;+;
And cheer up, my slaves shouldn't be sad, depite my Mean-ness >_>
So be happy~ c'mon, be happy *pokes you with a pointy stick* c'mon~
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I'm glad my inconsistent blabbering getting read by you :3 Ok, here is more.
Scary Momo is scaaary!
This is cute, but she still a pervert XD A cute one..
Oh, damn! I remember about this.. Third time of her series of disturbed sleep ? XDD
No next time? :D
Expect a German Suplex really soon.. XDD
Awww... Maasa always try to act tough.. But she still a girl :3
I've a pic of Maiha for this fic.
(http://xs414.xs.to/xs414/07164/maihamomo30541.jpg.xs.jpg) (http://xs.to/xs.php?h=xs414&d=07164&f=maihamomo30541.jpg)
She's such a flirt~♪
Thanks for the new chapter !
Hot damn xD Are we starting a dibs war too?
“Oh, by the way, your girlfriend showed up last night.”
Risako choked on her drink, and gave me the most peculiar glare I have ever received.
“If you’re talking about Maiha, then you’ve got it wrong. She’s not my girlfriend.”
“Yeah, well, you know what they say about when you assume things…”
“What’s that?”
“Well… you just… shouldn’t.”
That’s some good Risako-logic for you right there.
“No… nothing has happened. Ever. Not now. Not before. And it probably never will. So drop it.”
She seemed… disappointed… when she said all of that to me. Her face seemed to reflect a bit of the same thing, and for a moment, I felt bad for picking on her like that. Maybe there was more going on here than I realized…
“Well… Maiha’s not really into… commitments… like, if I really was her girlfriend… she’d still flirt with and mess around with all of the other girls… and even though I may… well… like her… just a little bit though, of course… I don’t do the whole sharing thing.”
She was being really sincere about all of this. I could tell that she had put a lot of thought into this.
“I just wish that…”
“You wish that Maiha could be that person.”
“Yeah… She may seem like an insufferable flirt… and well, she is, but… There’s a good heart in there… I think she’s just hiding it.”
“Have you talked to her about this?”
“We don’t really… talk. Maiha doesn’t live here anymore... Actually, I think she and that other girl… the really tall rough-looking one? They kind of wander around a lot. Yesterday was the first time that I had seen her in… a long time.”
A car honked outside, and Risako and I exchanged glances before we both got up to go over to the window, peering outside. Natsuyaki was standing beside this very nice-looking car, and was staring up at us from her position on the street.
“Come on, losers! We have to go pick up Kumai from her house now, remember?”
“Oh, by the way, your girlfriend showed up last night.”
Risako choked on her drink, and gave me the most peculiar glare I have ever received.
“Well… you just… shouldn’t.”
That’s some good Risako-logic for you right there.
At least, I had never heard anything about this ‘epic fling’..
Actually, I think she and that other girl… the really tall rough-looking one? They kind of wander around a lot.
“Come on, losers! We have to go pick up Kumai from her house now, remember?”
Dibs on first comment! xD
Hot damn xD Are we starting a dibs war too?
I knew Risako had something big for Maiha xD But it is a shame that Maiha is a Fujimoto Jr. and Risako is a Risako :< Don't give up Risako~! Maiha will stick with you eventually~! <3
Roffle at Miyabi at the end xD
But I'm still curious of her and Captain's relationship back then =_=; I sense that Miyabi was the one with the crush on Captain, and felt betrayed when she left the troupe, ne? At least that was what my first impression :< Cover it quick!
-pets your hardhat to make sure its powers are in check- :]
Woo! So Risako definitely likes Maiha. XD And I was right, Momo feels something for Maasa. XD
Mmhmm, Miyabi. XD I like her, even if all she did in this chapter was drive up in a car. XD
-sits and waits patiently for the show to begin- XD
So in a small way they're sort of outsiders as well, Sort of..hnn...
Now, My slave prepare to lose!! O_O
also can't forget this
-insert crapload of scaryfaces-
~Update Fimmy-poop o_o
That tall rough-looking one name is Maasa -_-""" Learn to google! XD
Damn.. That is too EVIL! Another side of me reading that as a challenge.. :D *take a look around*
Hehe, all the sweetness from the conversation between Momo and Risako made me full :3
Too much to read! Argh, I can't keep up, with so much going on, I don't even know what to comment on. Except evil Momo, I like evil Momo.
Yay for angry, sleepy Momo!! And it's obvious that Risako and Maiha were together. Risako...let her flirt...you can get back at her later. Be "angry" and make her buy you things! ;) And of course...Miyabi's one line rocked.
Hello! I've been stalking this fic for a while. I have no excuses for not commenting except for being lazy, sorry. But I've decided to come out of the dark to show my support :D
I only just got into Berryz recently, so I don't know much about them at all but I think this helped me keep my interest in them a lot! Everyone has pretty much said what I want to say about the recent chapters, so I'll start seriously commenting on the content next chapter (which I believe should be very soon if this rate of updating is continued o_o!). But Miyabi's awesome line deserves a mention right here right now :D
When you leave five girls alone in an empty theatre with no supervision, bad things are bound to happen.
I wonder what they'll find in the library? ?_?
Risako was clinging to and cutting off the circulation of my arm as we sat in the backseat of Natsuyaki’s demon-mobile. The girl couldn’t drive. Period. So why were we there in the first place? Because the theatre was too far from both Risako’s apartment and Yurina’s house, and besides that we weren’t going to make the poor girl hobble around on her crutches when she didn’t have to.
That determination melted clean away once she realized whose car was parked outside, and her face turned very, very white.
Yurina was seated at the grand piano that was on the stage, writing out notes on a stack of blank staff paper that Risako had found for her. She was so absorbed in doing this, that I thought it best to just leave her alone for a while.
I couldn’t see much in the darkness, but I could hear the creaky groan of a doorknob being turned, and Risako pulled me in along behind her. I had absolutely no idea what we were getting into.
Dibs on first! :D Haha I beat Yuu to it! XD
Miyabi the crazy driver! Fufufufu. Poor Risako, it must be truly shocking an experience. XD
I wonder what's inside the room. Probably something unexpected. XD
-sits and waits- Oh and thanks for the popcorn. :D
Dibs on second! xD
Oh my, unused library? Perhaps Miyabi scares the crap out of them, earning a slap/punch from one of the two xD!
That or they might find secret information of some sort o_o'
I love Miyabi's driving skills. Very much. :]
DRIVING MIYABI! Nice! Do you have any idea how entertaining it is to have a crazy driver who has know idea where they're going in your story for me? Reading that put a smile on my face. Reminds me of past experiences. I can only imagine how she learned how to drive. I assume video games...but who knows...But poor Risako. She had to give directions and ended up cowering under the seat (if she knew it was Miyabi driving, why didn't she put on a seatbelt?). And judging by Yurina's reaction...I take it Miyabi's driving is known. And it seems Umeda is a victim of Miyabi's teasing. Bored Miyabi is a serious threat too it appears. When is she not threatening? Somehow I doubt she's less of a threat while sleeping....
Cliffhanger...I'm afraid of heights though....
I love playing with the windows in cars. That's so much fun.
I wonder what they'll find in the library? ?_?
Wahhh!!
New chapter yay!!
Now, I would do my quoting routine but I'll do that later tomorrow after school
~Sigh~ I must've been real tired...and of course asleep to be this late of a commenter ;+;
Damn..
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*kicks you* XDXD
A unicorn?
fic comment time
THE HILARITY, OH GOD THE HILARITY *dies*
Lol, Risako clinging to Momo is cute :3 Miya devilish meter is hiking .. XD
Poor Yurina :D
:heart: (only that can describe her :3)
Something good or bad ? Guess we will wait till next chapter then.. (My concentration lost for a while, maybe because I just had my lunch. Forgive me if the comments seem lame -_-")
Saki wasn’t used to waking up in somebody else’s arms. That, and she wasn’t used to Chinami actually being around in the morning, especially since the younger girl was prone to running off at this time of the day. She wasn’t complaining, though. It just meant one less thing to worry about.
“Nyaaaaaaa~ah… lots las’night. Then this mornin’… more, cuz I had… -hiccup- a real bad headache…”
“Like you’re searchin’ for somethin’… -hiccup- inside me… tryin’ to… -hiccup- find m’secrets… Stop it.”Maasa always doing the tough routine...She needs a hug!! >w< *Huggles the drunky*
That serious tone had crept back into Maasa’s drunken voice, and Saki knew that she was treading on thin ice now. The taller girl could be a really stupid, clumsy drunk, but she could also be a really mean, dangerous drunk. And no one in their right mind wanted to be hit by the powerhouse that was Sudou Maasa.
Maasa shook her head roughly, and Saki watched as the other girl staggered off and nearly got herself entangled within the chain-link fence that surrounded the house. That was when she realized something.
…Did she fall off the ladder a minute ago?
All of a sudden, bright light split through my vision, and I had to cover my eyes for a moment while they adjusted to the change. That didn’t stop me from scowling at Risako, though.
“A warning would have been nice.”
Just be patient and wait.”
“I’d like to know what I’m waiting for, though…”
“Ah! I can’t believe I found it! Come and look Momo-chan, I think you’ll be excited!”
I let out a long-suffering sigh and got to my feet, brushing the dust off of my pants. Risako was holding a score of some song, and I walked over to her, peering over her shoulder in order to read the title at the top of the page. My eyes widened as I began to comprehend what it was that she held in her hands.
This is…
Dibs on first comment! <3
Gotta love my spazzing from AIM xD
Aww at Chinami and Captain at the beginning.
Oh my, Maasa is certainly stubborn about keeping her touch image in front of everyone, drunk or not o_o; I wonder what her secrets really are... Hope Saki finds them soon xD
I think Risako and Momoko found Love Machine xD
...Or Anata nashi de wa ikete yukenai xD
WHOO!! >_<
I did it!! I made it faster! O_O
I wonder what music is the sheet music...>_> Bad engrish I know >_>
I wuv this chapter though! >w<
Maasa drunk and I bet I know why >w<
QUOTES!! =D
Well now, ain't that just flippin' adorable! >w<
XDXDXD I love her reason XD
Maasa always doing the tough routine...She needs a hug!! >w< *Huggles the drunky*
I have no idea why but I laughed hard at this XDXDXD
Lol, I love the attitude XDXD
THIS IS WHAT ?! WHAT IS IT!!??? >w<
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*pinches your cheeks* RAWR!!
Bah I was asleep when you updated. Meh, or I would have beat Loser to it. :P
Anyway, Maasa being a tough drunk wwas interesting. Her attitude's funny when drunk. XD I almost just want to shove her in Momo's direction and say "just hook up with her already!" XD.
Hmm I wonder what they found? If it's like Yuu said and they found Love Machine, I'll just die of laughter. XD
Update more soon! ^_^
This is…
I really couldn’t believe my eyes. This was a song that I had never heard myself, but I had heard about it. The song that had made this theatre… this troupe… and perhaps even this city famous for the performing arts. Not because of the lyrics or the music… in fact, it had nothing at all to do with the song itself… but rather…
…the person who had performed it for the first time.
*♪“Embrace... this entire city! Embrace… these dreams!”♪
“Risako-chan… how did you… I don’t even…”
She seemed to be very, very proud of herself, and was grinning at me from ear to ear.
“You don’t even know what to say, do you? I remembered about this yesterday when you were talking about finding other songs… and so I thought I could surprise you with it.”
♪“You’re such a flirt tonight, aren’t you? Don’t tease me…”♪
“Can I hold it?”
It would have been strange for anyone else to be in awe of a score of music, but Risako understood how I was feeling, and she handed it over as delicately as possible. My fingers tingled just a little bit when they came into contact with the slightly worn paper, and it was all I could do to keep from trembling. I mean…
This was it.
Talk about holding your destiny in your hands. Not to mention the past…
♪ Heartbeat! A heart-pounding night! A night I’d never want to end- endless summer night!♪
can’t dance like she could.
I can’t sing like she did.
I’ll never even be half the person that she still is…
…
…Because I’m nothing like my mom.
Never… never EVER again… Especially not if it’s free…
She was going to turn around and head back towards the loft, when a small body shot out of nowhere, colliding with her own very unstable one and knocking both of them to the concrete
Saki wasn’t used to waking up in somebody else’s arms.
She carefully slid out of the tanned girl’s grasp, standing up to stretch and yawn and allow her eyes some time to adjust to the sunlight shining through the decaying roof. But the brightness outside was in sharp contrast with how gloomy she felt on the inside.
Concerned, the small girl quickly made her way down the ladder and onto the ground, coming to a crouch beside Maasa. If her bloodshot eyes and slurred, broken speech weren’t enough to prove that the female was drunk, her alcohol-scented breath surely was…
“Maasa, you don’t drink more alcohol to get rid of a hangover that you got from getting drunk!”
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FIRST DIBS <3
Figures it would be Elegies. I dance to that in the shower all the time xD
Oooooh, Momoko's mom used to be a part of this? I think Momo definitely understands the reputation O_O; Does this mean Ai was a part of this too? If that's the case, Ai's like, 30 in this story O____O; Or at least in her late 20s... o_o;
Maasa's losing that tough girl image. It's inevitable xD I wonder who really triggers her character development xD
Looking forward to the next chapter, Fimmy-chan!
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Holy Crap!! =O
That was good! >w<
What gonna happen next huh huh huh huh huh?!?! *pokes you with a pointy stick* C'Mon!!!
Quoting quoting quoting yeah yeah yeah!! WHOO!
=O Oh, my its really something to be treasured
But, I really can't figure out the song! >_<
Um...is it Summer Night out? ~ Morning Musume???
Am I right?
No I think I'm wrong DAMN!
=O...Poor Momo-chan!! *Hugs poor Momo* ;+;
Why must you make this dramatic!?
But drama is good I love drama!
Keep going!
Yeah...Right, I believe she'll drink..again...in one of the future chapters I think
Momo and Maa-chan confrontation!! =O
Is it gonna be more maaxMomo moments is it!?
Momo is gonna see past Maasa's tough girl exterior right!?
Or is something going to intervene!?
I GOTTA KNOW!! >w<
UPDATE DAMMIT!!
=)
If you feel tired, you should sleep
It's the weekend whoo!!!!
=D
By the way,
>;P Who ever said I was falling behind? kukukukuku
Ooooh, Momo's mom was involved? Wah. Must be quite a discovery for her.
And yay for Momo/Maasa collision....in more than one way hmm? XD
Post more soon! XD
Why Captain always seem cute although she just doing a simple thing :heart:
If she keep moving cutely I'll die before finish reading this X_X
WTH, I though you're just joking.. She /is/ drunk!
Lol, Maasa.
SPARTA! (someone should say it >_> LOL)
I'll be waiting for this legendary music piece (or something else) Loving cute Captain in this :3 Thanks FIM!
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Elegies - Inshouha Renoir no You ni ! Just... wow.. (yeah, i google the name because it's hard to spell -_-", i remember this dakishimete !)
I can feel Momo's feeling when she recalled back her most treasured memory... It is a great shock to her... (I'm typing with one hand, because my lunch is in the other hand lol.. it's so hard to quote -_-")
Haha, "endless summer night" gave the song away :D Did Love MACHINE actually have similar lyrics? :O
Momoko's mom? That would've been the last person I expected. Things are starting to get more mysterious now :o! Now I really want to know what happened before! >_<;;
Poor Maasa! I have a feeling she's not gonna be a loner for that much longer, unless if our dear author of this story is cruel enough to make her stay a loner.. >_<!! Which, of course, won't happen, right!? Right!?!?
Looking forward to some Maasa x Momoko next update :D
Did I die just now? Maybe I got hit by a car… Damn. So… would that be a demon, then…? …Or an angel?So cute >w<
“Well… I can’t just leave you here like this… I guess I can take you back to Risako’s apartment… it’s not that far from here. But you’re going to have to try and get up, because you’re bigger than I am and I can’t carry you.”*squeal* >w<
The devil girl sat down on the other side of the piano bench, still grinning from ear to ear. She nudged Yurina with her elbow.She's so evil Oh my god! XDXDXDXD
“Guess.”
“What?!?”
“Just guess. I’ll tell you if you get it wrong three times.”
“Did you tie her upside down somewhere?!?”
“Nope, but I’ll keep that in mind. Guess again.”
“…You didn’t lock her in a closet, did you?”
Silence. That mischivous grin…
“DID YOU?!?”
Miyabi smirked, letting out a slight cackle. She was very, very proud of her evil deed.
“Oh yeah.”
“Miya, she’s claustrophobic!”
Miyabi immediately shot up from the piano bench and started to head for the door.Just like a villain, thought she could get away with it too! >=O
“Great, let’s get goin’ then!”
“NATSUYAKI MIYABI, YOU GO AND GET ERIKA-CHAN OUT OF THAT CLOSET NOW!”
Loser87 to get on your back so she can throw stuff at you and make you write*
I stole first comment yay! -bounces around hyperly-
And anyway, haha Momo is such a nice girl. XD Helping Maasa to Risako's apartment? Mmhmm, I wonder what Risako would think (I frankly don't think she minds all that much but ehhh...).
Miyabi is evil. I love her. XD Locking Erika in a closet when she's claustrophobic. That's just sadistic. XD
Now I wonder where they will start looking for Momo...? ^_^
Update more soon!
Aww! Momoko's kind :] So will the pairing be Maasa x Momoko? I don't think Momo should have trouble carrying Maasa, that girl's got serious muscles o_o; That and her pinkies of doom probably work out too xD
Roffle at Erika being claustrophobic and Miyabi being mischievious xD Glad to know she has another side from being bitchy, that side that causes mischief XD
I wonder what would happen with Maasa and Momoko in Risako's apartment xD
-gets out whip- :]
Gosh Miya is so evil O_O
That's meeaaannn XDXDXD
I wonder what will happen between MomoXMaasa >;P
C'mon Update faster *pokes with my pointy stick again*
C'mooonnn~ *prods prods w/ a pointy stick*
O_O O_O O_O O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O
~Update
*Cracks a whip*
MUSH YAH YAH YAH!!
-Tanachan's praisings and throwing things and overall awesomeness that has made FIM's day-
Why can't you be polytheistic so that we're The Goddesses xD
O_O....AHHH!! *on FIM's Back.*
Well, ain't this just quaint...
*Pulls your ears*
Update dammit~~
Hey, what about me tanachan, I am a god of cheesecakes you know ;+;
*continues to pull FIM's ears and yet still manages to do her hair too* >_>
The introduction scene about drunk Maasa feel likes she's in heaven :D With a headache lol. Momo is like an angel that descend to earth to help Maasa :3 I agree with Yuuyami, Momo will has no problem carrying Maasa XD
Yurina! :heart: Her anata nashide wa ikite yukenai piano solo sending a chilling sensation to my bones. At first, I though Miyabi following it with the Aishitai line, but it just the word that stucked in her head ^_^ OMG, Miya is so evil! ( I don't really count how much i said that earlier XD, maybe she'll changes after captain embrace her back :heart:)
Alright, time to look out for Momo! (because Yurina play the piano, this is a beautiful chapter too :heart:) Keep up the good work FIM !
And then, as if some kind of supernatural magnet had drawn me in to her lips, I kissed her.
Insert Maasa monologue here..
“Breathe, Momoko, breathe…”
And then, as if some kind of supernatural magnet had drawn me in to her lips, I kissed her.
DIBS O__O;
Roffle and Momoko and her guns joke xD
I think I have more of an idea of Maasa's past now. Perhaps she did something so immoral that she's caused herself to close up like that. I think Chinami might've been involved too, considering she's 'the broken one' so to speak.
Maasa kissed Momo! OMG O___O;
I hope Momo carries on with the performance. Shiori's kid and all xD
-cracks whip- Write more!
DIBS
*SQUEALS*
>w<
*hugs You!!*
I <33 you so much now!!
WHO CARES ABOUT THE OTHER QUOTES!
ONLY THIS ONE MATTERS!! >w<
XoX I am..dying..Can't..Must..Continue...to..LIVE..
To read until the end and..Defeat..FIM...In..war..GAH!!
Feel better my slave if you are like..uberly sick
If not, SUCK IT UP! >=O
*still on your back soooo Continues to pull your ears*
UPDATE!! Or I'll start pulling hair! >;P
O_OO_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O__O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O_O
~Update doofus
*Cracks whip too*
GO MY SLAVE GO!!
Whoa Maasa! XDDDD -breaks out the cookies- Here Fimmy! XD
I likey this chapter. ^_^ -ish lazy with my comments-
-sits and waits for more- XD
WAAAAAAA~~~~
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*starts singing Hyokorri Hyoutanjima*
So sweet! *teeth fall out from cavities* But at the same time...so sad and angsty *is actually crying*
*throws another box, but this time has Momoko and Maasa inside instead of Cheesecake-chan*
I love how you describe her feeling here... It gives out a warm and beautiful feeling.. How she watches Momo's every single movement, how she finds out that she's not bored watching Momo all the time..
:heart:
In a serious conversation with Momo, suddenly I found this part is really funny :D
OMG! :imdead:
Oh! I never knew we had this emoticon: :imdead: Oops, okay, back to the chapter <_<;;
When I was reading through the chapter, it was like "yay, Maasa x Momoko! :heart:" and then the last sentence came and it was like "OMFG, MAASA x MOMOKO! :heart: :heart: :heart:" ^^;
I wonder what happened to Maasa in the past? Hmm, I'm sure some time in the future Momoko'll be told (which means we readers will know too, hopefully ^^;; ) Looks like this story is getting really interesting now! (Of course, I don't mean it wasn't interesting before or anything!)
Can't wait for next update ^_^
“Oh, Socko… my love for you burns with-”
“Yes, yes, the white-hot intensity of a bunch of suns, I know. Look, Maiha… can this wait? I’m kind of busy right now.”
“No, dearest, it can’t. I want you to go on a date with me.”
Risako’s face burned as she heard Miyabi giggling from behind her, and she almost wished that she could dig a hole right there in the concrete so that she could bury herself. On the other hand, another part of her wanted to accept that offer… it screamed at her… and she could only do her best to ignore it.
“Say you’ll go out with me.”
“Maiha…”
“It’s just one date, Socko. One date. It won’t kill you, I promise. You might even actually have fun with me.”
I know I’d probably have fun with you, Maiha… That’s what I’m worried about. I like you a lot, you know… probably more than you know…
Risako was getting frustrated. Every minute they wasted there talking about that nonsense was another minute that Momoko could get lost even farther, or worse: something bad could have happened to her. Anything was possible in this city. She groaned, and finally gave up, mumbling a response.
“Fine… I’ll go on a date with you…”
“Well, well… your girlfriend is an… interesting person.”Not yet anyways XDXDXD
“She’s NOT my girlfriend. Now come on, let’s keep moving. Momoko could be anywhere by now…”
She also wasn’t expecting to run into Shimizu Saki, either.*gasp* CONFRONTATION YAY!!!!
Miyabi was getting bored with the search, and kept lagging behind to try and mess with Erika, who had taken refuge behind Yurina and her metal crutches.
It was a familiar face, one that was grinning wildly and had a single rose secured in it’s lips, and Risako didn’t know whether to be surprised or to roll her eyes.
Aww! This chapter was so cute!
The scene of Maiha doing the fishy pose with Erika is so hilarious to imagine, Erika's so much taller than Maiha xDDDDDDD
Maiha seems so desperate to get Risako on a date with her, is she really what Risako says and will throw all that away for more women? ;_; Seeing how she hasn't really said "I love you" to her yet, I guess she will throw it away :/
Write faster! -cracks whip multiple times-
oh My~
I <33 it oh so much
I love it oh so much XD
Are you feeling better though? hn?~
If you are then..*pulls your ears* WORK HARDER!!
If not...*Pulls your ears* GET BETTER!!
O_O
Quotes
*ssexy beast**ssexy beast*
I wanna see RiiXMaiha date >w<
So Hurry up or I'll kick yer ass!
Haha, Risako knows she wants too XD
Not yet anyways XDXDXD
*gasp* CONFRONTATION YAY!!!!
HURRY UP AND POST!!~
~C'Mon~ *pokes pokes pokes pokes*
I said hurry up!!
O_O
XDDDDD
lol Maiha.. casanova!
Somebody please give her a lesson! >w<
Lovey dovey :heart:
Argh! I wanted to know about Momo and Maasa! Cliffhangers! Yerg... *retreats to shadowy recesses to await the next chapter* Evil people...
Yay I'm your favorite because I don't threaten you? XD -gives you more cookies- XD
Haha at Maiha being so persistent. ^_^ That move with Erika made me LOL. So...cliched. XD Maiha needs better pickup lines. ;) Can't wait to see her date with her beloved Socko. XD
Now I totally want to see what happens with Miyabi/Saki. Fufufu.
-spreads out a blanket and lies down to wait-
KYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA~!!!!!!!!
*deathly chokingly hugs you*
Hehe...Maiha flirting with Erika...that's gotta be so funny!
For a few minutes it felt like I was in heaven. I hadn’t expected my first kiss to be so warm and soft… and gentle. Then again, I hadn’t expected that I would get my first kiss that day, either. Or from a girl that I barely knew. Her lips left mine, and she leaned forward so that our foreheads touched, letting out a quiet sigh.
“I probably shouldn’t have done that…”
I smiled, closing my eyes. How somebody could feel so guilty over something like a little kiss was beyond me. It wasn’t as though I couldn’t have pulled away, and to be honest, I hadn’t wanted to. So I was just as ‘guilty’ as she was. I didn’t know what I was doing… and I didn’t know where this was going, but… if this was how it started out then I was curious to see where it might lead.
“You regret it already…? I didn’t think that I would be that bad at kissing…”
I was glad she couldn’t see my face just then, because I’m pretty sure it was getting pretty pink right there. However, I waited for the ‘but…’ that was sure to come. Those ‘buts’, always shoving themselves in where they weren’t wanted.
“But… I’m not sure that I want anything to happen here… So… I’m sorry, I didn’t want to send out mixed signals like this. I really shouldn’t have done that.”
“Ah- Risako-chan…”
Even though some part of Saki was happy to see her old friends again… another part of her was telling her to run as fast as she could in order to get away from them. Unfortunately, there was a problem. Miyabi had already spotted her, and was giving her the most venomous look that she could muster.
“You don’t have the right to speak to her any more… or any of the rest of us, for that matter. What are you doing here?”
Miyabi’s voice was cold, and her words definitely cut into Saki’s heart, but she preferred them to the silent treatment.
“Where have you been for the past two years, then?”
It was the question. The one that Saki had been waiting for. The one that she knew she couldn’t answer without expecting this girl to be angry at her. She deserved all of this hatred, though, she supposed… after all, she had been the one to walk away.
“I’ve been here.”
“I haven’t seen you once since before yesterday, so I’m not sure that I believe you.”
“Well, for one thing, I didn’t want to be found, so that was kind of the point, and for another, why does it matter to you, Miyabi?”
“Because I want to know if I’m going to have to avoid seeing your face again.”
Another sharp dart, laced with poison. But no matter how badly it hurt, Saki wouldn’t lash back out at the other girl. It simply wasn’t her way. She would take the hits everytime and then try to move on. But… how much more would she… or could she take? Not anymore today, that was for sure. She had other things to worry about.
“Don’t worry about that… I’ll make sure to stay out of your way, if that’s what you want.” She mumbled quietly, walking past Miyabi and making sure not to make eye contact. As she was leaving, however, she felt a gentle hand grab onto her wrist, and every ounce of her being hoped that it might have been Miyabi.
Turning around to see Risako’s kind face wasn’t bad, either. The younger girl said nothing, but Saki could see something like forgiveness in those eyes, and as she glanced at Yurina and Erika, she saw that they were mirroring the same expression.
“What the HELL did you do THAT for? You’re going to make her think that everything’s okay now, and it’s NOT, Risako.”
“You’re the only one who had a problem with her leaving, Miya…”
“Because she dropped everything that was important to her and abandoned us! We were at the top of our game and we lost our best performer, and for what? Oh, that’s right, we don’t know, because she didn’t have an explanation, so that must mean there’s no freakin’ reason at all.”
“You don’t know that.”
“And YOU do?”
Risako was doing an impressive job of standing up to the intimidating Miyabi, and even though she was frightened of the other girl, she wouldn’t dare back down now.
“I trust Saki-chan. I don’t need to know the reasons why she does what she does. She’s my friend, and I’ll love her anyway. And honestly, I think you’re mad because something happened to you personally, and so you’re trying to take it out on the rest of us because you didn’t get what you wanted-”
The force of the slap was enough to knock Risako to the ground, and the sound of it echoed off of the buildings nearby. Risako didn’t know that something could sting so badly, and she felt her eyes begin to water. Miyabi was standing over her now, and after receiving such a blow, the younger girl had started to tremble.
“Don’t ever talk to me like that again. You don’t know what happened, and so you have no business talking about it like that. I’m still the leader of this group, and so I’m going to treat the lot of you however I want to. Oh, and guess what? You have your beloved Saki to thank for that, too, because if she hadn’t left, you wouldn’t be in this mess. How does that make you feel, Rii-chan? Hm? It kind of sucks to think about it that way, doesn’t it? Suddenly, Saki’s not so great anymore, huh.”
Risako was crying now, but she still had a little bit of fight left in her, and she managed to glare up at the older girl through her tears.
“You’ll never be even a fraction of the person she is…”
The younger girl flinched as she saw Miyabi’s hand swing back again, but something stopped her from slapping Risako a second time.
I had my hand closed tight around Natsuyaki’s wrist, and even though I wanted really badly to pull backwards and send the girl sprawling to the ground, I am a better person than that. Or maybe it was because I wasn’t entirely there thanks to what had happened with Maasa. Either way, I was willing to negotiate before I sent my new rival into a world of pain.
“Touch her again and you’ll regret it, Natsuyaki.”
“Let go of me, Tsugunaga.” She replied, through gritted teeth. I wasn’t exactly feeling threatened, though. More like, amused, because try as she might she couldn’t get her arm free of my grasp. Oh, and she had stopped using my nickname as an insult, I guess.
Which was good, because I didn’t like to hear it coming out of her mouth.
“I’ll let go of you when I’m good and ready.”
Just to emphasize my point, I twisted the girl’s arm so that it was pinned up against her back, and she let out a yelp of surprise and pain.
What a rough day…
“I’m really sorry about it you know…”
“Go to sleep, Risako-chan…”
“…So what made you change your mind?”
“Oh, nothing… just a random change of heart, I suppose.”liar, liar pants on fire!! Sort of ;;>_>
“With you? There has to be something more.”
“Okay then, how about you tell me where you got that rose that’s sitting on the table over there?”
“Goodnight, Momo-chan!”
Haha, good night, Risako.
-Master wrote nice and awesome things in here for once and it made me really happy. :3-
-Estrea's my favorite, and we can have a picnic together with the cookies and the tea and other nice things. <3 And Yuu-chan and Loser can't come. >D-
Awesome Momoko! I have official like for her now. I was hoping that maybe Maasa would consider giving Momo a go and maybe open up to her a little, even if just as friends. Then again, I'm kinda glad you didn't go that route.
-Tanachan writes cool stuff and throws me neat things. I like that. <3-
“Airin, you’re fidgeting.”Airi!! <33
Beside her stood a taller, slightly older girl who didn’t seem to mind at all if she was seen by any passers-by. She had dark, wavy hair that settled on her shoulders, and was actually rather stunning, which was why she looked out of place standing in such a shady part of the city. Unlike her partner, she exuded a sense of both calm and patience.At first I guessed Maimi
“What are we going to do about it, Miracle?”But I guessed wrong obviously XDXD
“There’s more than one way to put out a flame… Personally… I prefer suffocation to the other methods… But… I think that I want to manipulate this particular flame before rubbing it out… make it burn for something much more… beneficial. Before we steal away the oxygen it needs to live.”And You made koharu quite cynical now =O
“It’ll be so nice to see Sudou-chan again… I’m sure that she’s missed you terribly.”oh? and Maasa knows them, maybe they're the ones who framed her =O
“Yes… but patience. All of this will happen in good time, Airin… all in good time.”
I can’t believe they took away my car…GOOD! You suck at driving anyways! >_>
Why do I feel sorry… for you?It's rabu and you want the rabu <33
“…what do you want?”
The tone Saki was using wasn’t angry, or impatient, or accusing… she sounded exhausted, and that only made Miyabi feel even worse. She didn’t really know what to say… or to think at that point.
What do I want?
“I don’t know… but… there’s still something here… isn’t there?”:heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart:
Even if sometimes I sit in my room and cry until I fall asleep…
“…But… I’m not going to let myself get hurt by you again. When you decide that… or if you want to fix things… You know where to find me… Sakitan…”
She had written it by herself, without Saki’s help… during those brief moments when she entered back into reality. At first, she had worried that she would forget everytime the madness came to claim her again, but miraculously, the words would always come, and she had managed to capture them on paper.HOORAY FOR CHINAMI!! >w<
She hadn’t expected the tall female not to be there when she arrived…Aww poor Chinami ;+;
Chinami peered through the dust-covered window… nothing. The house was empty. Surely nothing horrible had happened there, for there were no signs of a struggle or anything like that, but… if Yurina was alright… where would she go? Had she found something better to do with her time…?
Maybe she’s mad because I wasn’t there yesterday… Maybe I upset her…it gets better! I hope ;+;
That idea tore at Chinami’s already worn out heart. She didn’t want to do anything to hurt the person that she cared about most… She clutched the letter to her chest, managing to make a decision somewhere within the crazed signals of her mind.
…I hope that this will fix whatever I’ve done…
dibs
Okay, overall that was uberly cute >w<
I'm not going to do my quote thing today because...well...I feel like dying so >w<
I <3 everything about the chappie >w<
Like how Miya and Momo ganged up on risako XDXDXD
Anyways continue...Or I'll make you even sicker! *Coughs on you* TAKE THAT!!
GET SOME ASIAN DISEASES!! *Coughs on you more*
Update~ *prods by coughing on you* >;P
So are you going to cover the date in the next chapter or make us suffer?
^Agreed with rndmn, we really want to know how the date turns out! :D
Hehe...Miya is finally normal!
*SockoMaiha box'd joo!*
And that date is going to be like...
Maiha: *flirting with other girls*
Rii: *repeatedly slapping Maiha*
^LOL, so true, so true.
[Chapter 22]
Whoa, Airi and Koharu have something to do with Maasa? It seems to complicatedly complicated (!?!?) now, my head hurts :dizzy: Tell us the whole story soon! But damn, this better not mess with the budding Momoko x Maasa relationship. (this is impossible, isn't it T_T)
[Chapter 23]
Cute how Risako looks up to Momoko like that :heart: Hehe, loved how Momoko and Miyabi ganged up on Risako! I guess even enemies can work together towards a common goal (!?)
That date better be in the next chapter! I already can't wait for it :shy2:
Finally! thanks to exams I've been really behind on my reading xD
I've finally catched up with your updating xD You're updating really fast! not complaining though, hehe ^_^
I love the developments! the girls are getting serious practice, the bad guys have shown up (koha? haha never saw that coming)
And dates! whoo I think Risako's not the only one :) Momo will meet Maasa, right? xD
Can't wait for the next chapter :)
Who are you, and what have you done with Maiha?I like this line. XD
Dibs! XD When Yuu is away, Essy plays~ XD
I like this line. XD
Hehe Maiha wants something she can't get. The best way to get her attention is to reject her. XD Poor Risako is going to be in way over her head in this "game", because we ALL know Maiha's gonna win her over...but it seems to me that Maiha isn't going to win as easily as she thinks....in winning there's always an element of loss...hehehe....
Can't wait to see what you do to this couple. :heart:
And what's this, no update until late Saturday? ;_; Oh well, that gives me enough time to go work on Chapter 21 for my own story. XD Look forward to seeing your next chapter! Oh and here. -gives you candy- XD
Risako was worried about Maiha not being faithful, but what if she gives up flirting for Risha? Risako would have to fall totally for her then, right?
~Sighs..dibs on 3rd comment.. and will be edited on friday 4/27~
Stupid..computer..
--Edit--
Haha, I forgot about this ^^;;
I'm a poop-head, yes I am XD
Well, the date was quite not what I expected but it was <33
So I don't care XDXD
I <33 their itty bitty love XD
My comments have become shorter...OH NOES!!
MY EVIL-NESS HAS DECREASED!! WTH!?!?!
>_<;;
*throws a rock at you*
Did that make me evil-er?
*throws a cat*
Now?
Oh well, UPDATE!!!
O_O
And you get a cookie >w>
Wow there's a good 5 pages of new stuff since the last time I checked :ding: GRRRRR to stupid term papers. Otherwise I would have checked earlier. I still have another one left but I couldn't wait any longer. I might not be able to commenting after finishing everything, that's if I can even before someone finds out I'm not studying :sweat: Just wanna say you're doing a really good job and I love reading every single word
finally caught up *pant* i regret not finding this story earlier :fainted:
all i can say is that i love your story :hee:
and yay for maiha xD
Great chapter, o dang Risako was expecting a kiss?! XD
Ohohohohohoho~! This'll be fun. :luvluv2: :luvluv1: :luvluv2: :luvluv1: :luvluv2: :luvluv1: *glompage*
*YuriChina box VER 2 with CD box collection!*
I think I should have named my second alter ego Horny!Momo instead, even though I found it easier and more amusing to listen to her…XDXDXDXDXD I think I love you XDXDXD
Horny!Momo made me giggle very much xD
O_O;
Oh my, things really are going by serious now :x
Airi and Koharu sure know how to play villains xD Assuming that it is them who threatened them o_o
But hawt damn, fire? And killing the owners and presumably the daughter (Which I'm assuming is Chinami being psychologically scarred?)? Really harsh, why would they do such a thing? Unless they were some rival city dance competition or something.
SAKI AND MIYABI ;________________________________; Saki still loves you mucho Miyabi! LOTS of lovin' for you Miyabi! No acting like a bitch anymore~! ;____; -wonders when they'll make up/out soon-
WRITE MOOOOOORE ;_____; -ties whip around your neck and places foot upon your back to exert force when required-
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You made me mushy, I finally figured out why I've become less evil!
It's your damn story, so flippin' mushy it makes the evilest person into a some-what kind decent sweet happy person
DAMN YOU!! *Shakes fist*
Anyway, I really <3333 Saki and Miyabi's wittle rabu story ;___;
It made me go all sad inside and then happy when saki said there was still hope! >w<
So basically reading this chapter I went --squee-- --squee--- -squee-- every second >;P
XDXDXDXDXD I think I love you XDXDXD
I <33 MaaxMomo, SakixMiya Riixmaiha and ChiixYurina *-*
This story needs more Chiixyurina love *cough* *hinthint* *cough*..>w>
Like I said, You get a cookie if you update~
Now, just so you know I'm not very good at cooking and the things i make may turn out...Burnt...or..under-cooked..or even soapy or may have stuff that aren't suppose to be in there BUT I made it doing my best sooo... *gives you my home-made cookie!* ^w^ Eat it or else! >=(
*throws another rock at your head*
I still gotta be a bit evil you know >;3
~UPDATE, UPDATE, UPDATE!!!
KYAAAAAAAAAAA~!!!!!!!!
So sweet and awesome! *glomp*
But yeah, hope that sleepover was fun, and I think lack of sleep increases your flow xD
Have fun and stay up a while! Maybe this'll help...
*Berryz and Cookie box, with 700 individual packs of Pocky :heart:*
Lack of sleep? I understand. I went to bed at 5 too, writing All Aboard. T_T
Gah, my brains are too frazzled to give a proper comment, but I'll try my best.
Saki and Miyabi's story made me sad. Sigh. When duty comes over love...
Momo and Maasa...heh. Let's hope Maasa sorts it out soon and comes looking for Momo.
I get the feeling that the new villains are not Airi and Koharu...gut feeling. Argh, my head is too spinny to think clearly. @_@
Anyway, waiting as usual for the next chapter.
-takes aspirin-
This chapter made me melt *___*
Yurina and Chinami are so cute <33333 Wonder how their meeting will go.
I.
Freaking.
Love.
This.
Miyabi.
x.
Saki.
Scene.
So.
Freaking.
Much.
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I love how they communicate wordlessly, and then kiss <3333333333 It's so... them xD
Lmao at Momo teasing Risako about her beloved Maiha's lack of creativity xD I can just imagine it clearly in my head <3
WRITE MORE -cracks whip furiously- WE NEED MORE LOVIN'!!!!!
dibs
XDDDD
Miyabi and Saki make me smile. <3 Wordless communication is such a rare gift, only bestowed to people with a good connection with one another. <3 Ahhhhhh, so Miyabi will be slightly less bitchy? Still evil though, I hope? XD
Yurina and Chinami...hmm, I look forward to their meeting, especially if Chinami actually manages to make it. I have a feeling something might happen...or maybe I'm just pessimistic.
And LOL at Momoko's comment at the end. Maiha is so unimaginative. XD And Risako has no idea how to rebut properly, does she? XD
Write more soon~
-gives you candy floss-
Wow...nice chappie, srry, gotta run, brother being a tard and is on mky back about the internet cord. I'll let my actions speak for me...
*throws Berryz box*
with the help of my very perverted, yet well-meaning friendI like this description of Maiha. :D
--dibbers--
*cough* *cough* Houston...we have a problem
It seems like I've caught the cold + Allergies but...
My mom got allergy medicine sooo...it's Cold + Minor Allergies = A slightly less crappy, runny nose, me =]
.....THERE ISN'T ENOUGH TOKUMA LUUUUURRRVVVEEE >w<
Which reminds me...I haven't written about them in a while myself >_>
Anyways, Back to commenting of the chapter
I squeeled, I squeeled more, then I worked out, then I came back and squeeled again =]
I <33 the couples *sigh* So very very cute >w<
I <333 MaaxMomoko >w<
It was so adorable GYAH!
I will die soon because of you =+='
but, I gotta be alive for your next update...WHICH HAS BETTER BE SOON!!!
YAY!!!
UPDATE!!
O_O O_O O_O O_O O_O O_O O_O >_O O_< O_O;;......... >w< >_< >~<;;....>O<!!!
*sneezes on you*
.....Mmm...yummy...asian infested snot..o_o;;...
Update~ XDXD
Ahhhhh. Many things explained here. :D
First off, Yurina/Chinami <333333333333333 XD
Momoko sticking the note on Risako's forehead. XD
And then Momoko/Maasa <3333333333333
I like this description of Maiha. :D
Sorry for the lack of anything but <3333 reactions. XD You say there's an OMGWTFBBQ moment coming up next chapter? Holy. XD -cross fingers-
Now next chapter kthxplz. XD
-gives you chocolate- ^_^
Fluff! Now I have something to rest my head on as I go to sleep tonight. And LOL at the makeshift post-it. Variety is the spice in life...or in this case Jam for the Berryz.
So...Chinami go stuck in a fire due to arsen caused by Airi and Koharu who Maasa used to know. Then Captain left to take care of crazy Chinami so Miyabi was pissed. Then Miyabi tripped Yurina which brought in Momo. Who is cousin to Risako who is being pursued by Maiha. And then Ai got drunk and is now in the hospital so everyone is interacting with each other in some way, shape, or form. That is interesting.
Wait..so did Miyabi trip Yurina so that they needed another dancer which would've been Captain?
Everything seems so happy and peaceful now, but I don't know for how long. I mean, they're human teens prone to emotions. So would that mean that when everything is revealed to the characters Miyabi will get angry at Chinami which would make Yurina angry and leave Saki uncomfortable. And Maasa would be feeling guilty so that would make Momo sad. And then Risako would be sad cause Momo's sad and then Maiha'd be sad. Wait...what if Miyabi and Chinami got into a fight? No. That won't happen. I don't want it to. It's the calm before the storm cause they haven't met Airi and Koharu, but they will not get into a fist fight. They already were brooding in the beginning. No more brooding. More happiness and fluff so that I can get a good nights sleep...my body is completely sore. Ack! I just put too much suspense in my head....better use the fluff now...
Awww how cuuuuuute! MaMo is hawt <333333333 and I've actually done a makeshift post-it...except I smashed it down on my brother's family jewels to get revenge for him attacking me with 7 bottles of AXE. And...YURICHINA <333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333333 *dies of hawtness*
*is watching Godzilla vs Mothra and can't help seeing Saki as Mothra and Miya as Godzilla*
*and Maasa and Momo as the Shobijin xD*
Holy awesome hell-ness! This story is so sweet, that I think three teeth just fell from my mouth. I can't wait to see how you finish this up.
MomoXMaasa<3 One couple i never really thought of, but you make it work well
looking forward to the next chapter :)
The storm approaches....I'm very intrigued as to how you made Koharu a evil, crazy pyromaniac. And what's this I read about a scar? Let me guess....Koharu is the daughter of some politician. j/p What makes me wonder most is Maasa's past. I mean...the others are pretty much left open to inference, but Maasa's has more of a veil around it. So...does that mean we'll get a chapter about how Koharu and Maasa tie in to each other?
ZOMGAAAAAAA!!! *huddles in corner away from evil Koha* This has such a potential to have a completely twisted and creepy ending. Nice job on the horror aspect, btw *thumbs up* Now for your treat...and btw, hope your back feels better!
*throws MomoMaasa box filled with sushi, ice packs and every H!P PB in existance*
Oooohhhh, this is interesting :]
Maasa's obviously connected to Airi and Koharu, that and she seems to also have been involved with the fire those years ago. It also seems that Maasa and Koharu once had something special together, but eventually, they drifted apart (how they did probably has to do with Maasa's scar) and now Maasa's found some lovin' in Momoko, I bet Koharu's secretly pissed and wants to do something about it xD Or Koharu is slightly surprised and puts it away because it's in the way of Airi and Koharu's true intention of taking down the theatre xD
Anywho, I look forward to the evil people of doom :]
That and Saki x Miyabi.
And Risako x Maiha.
Anywho.
-wraps whip around your foot and hangs you upside down over a dramatic rock-with-waves-crashing-against-it scenery- WRITE OR SUFFER
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<3
FIRST DIBS XDD
Wow, Maiha brings home women? Roffle xD
Nn, I stick by what I said before, Maasa was definitely involved, and apparently she probably were the ones who killed the owners and had a change of heart when Koharu and Airi wanted her to kill Chinami as well, and went against them. Poor Maasa needs a shoulder to cry on :< -lassos in Momoko with the whip- :]
Koharu and Airi want to finish the job eh? I do wonder what the owners and Chinami did to piss them off so much o_o... Unless they were blinded by fury or gangsta-entertainment o_o;
-does the same fishy move with holding you over the sea- WRITE <3
dibbers
*sigh*
That was an amazing read ~w~
I'm sorry I didn't reply to your previous chapter, things came up >w<
But To make it up, I'll be nice...In this comment lol
No, throwing rocks, no radioactive kittens, no evil throwing or staring or pulling, pushing, sneezing of any kind!
Honest! Girls scout honor! (I was never part of the girls scout lol)
Anyway, Maiha!! JEBUS!!!
>w<
She's such a...A...UMPH!!
Like...Grr and and..Touchy feely Argghh!
Koharu and Airi are so evil, jebus..>w<
But You gotta' have villains in a midst of a ragtag group of heroes
I'm trying to imagine what would Chinami do, something crazy? Like how Niki becomes Jessica in Heroes?
Or Something barbaric and just all out rage like the Hulk?
Or just bent on emotion of revenge like Venom >w<
Yeah I'm a geek but I'm a cute geek so BLAH!
Update please!!~~
~Prods you with the non-pointy stick of non-doom~
^w^
And Chinami is going to burst and go on a Hulk rampage. I'm not serious, but she seems to be prone to that course of action when she's angry or stressed. Poor Chinami....she has to deal with the people who almost caused her to die again. On a lighter note, when I read that she was running on rooftops, my mind jumped to Spider-Man. Blame the fact that I watched it 2 days ago. (Marvel's getting to me) But Chinami hears voices? What do they say to her? Is it like the little leprachaun (sp?) that Ralph has that tells him to burn things? Oh wait, no that's Koharu. So what do they say? Does it have anything to do with what to do with Yurina?
Go Momo!! You must play the part of Sherlock Holmes san the British accent. A Watson might not be too bad though. You know Momo, if you listen to Rational!Momoko for a while, she might let Optimistc-Horny!Momoko take over every now and then.
Okay...Maiha if you want to get Risako back...stop bringing back women. Just work with Risako. I hear that younger people are a bit easier to manipulate in these situations.
Maiha knows something. She knows what happened. Even though she is a bit of a player, she means well. But she needs to act soon. Momoko needs to find a way to get Maiha to tell her what happened and they need to act. People can mean well, people can want good things to happen, but if they don't do anything, no good will come of it.
I also don't think that going to the police station will be of too much help. I might be wrong, but if they treat Momo like a kid, and she doesn't get any info from them, will she ask the dancers? Like Maiha?
Whoa sorry I forgot to comment last chapter... >< Forgive me...? -gives you cookies-
Anyway, interesting. I get the feeling Maasa used to hang out with Airi and Koharu and was manipulated into helping them with the fire. But evidently she must have backed out and tried to stop them in the end, which saved Chinami's life as it turned out. Hmm.
I look forward to where you take the plot. Here, have some sweets. XD
Holy crap! I haven't been able to comment for like the last gazillion chapters! Stupid homework >_<.I don't think anyone wants to hear me rambling on and on about each chapter, so I'll just go with the latest chapter.
Rofl at Momoko's "I'll just beat the little punk up" XD. I can't imagine Momoko beating Maiha up. I can't imagine Momoko beating ANYONE up (even though she has muscles) >_<. I guess Momoko has to go beat the crap out of Maiha now. I was scared that Maiha would just go "win" Risako and get back to her player days but it seems that I underestimated her.. she didn't even win her yet but she's already messing around with someone else? Stupid Maiha >:(
Looks like more mysteries are being revealed! Maasa was manipulated to kill someone? I didn't expect this fic to go in a dark direction. I wonder what Koharu and Airi wanted in the first place? So scared about what might happen to the girls >_<.
Haha, I predict that Momoko will sneeze in the next chapter because of Maiha <_< gosh, I'm so retarded :D
dibs
Ahhh MiyaSaki lurve... >w<
Its giving me cavaties!!
Your gonna have to pay for my dentist bills!
After all it's your fault for making things so sugary sweet!
Either way, You need to write more lurve scene MORE I SAY MORE!!!
Hurry before I throw godzilla at you o_o
or worse...THIS!! TA-DA~ *A katamari!!*
O_O
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE WITH LOTS AND LOTS OF LURRRRRVVVEEE~~
Or else you get your ass kicked and the real 100% evil me will come out..
The one that first made it's appearance when I first commented you ever!
And that was pretty gosh darn mean!
Now Update! *pokes you with my Pointy stick of pointy doom!!* (My pointy stick's name is Mr. Pointy..RESPECT MR. POINTY!)
O_O
Update!
*Prods you to update with Mr. Pointy..Prodding Prodding..*
O_O
Botha'
Nice Miyabi/Saki scene! <333333333
Sorry just woke up so reply will be incoherent. :D
I do so hope that these two patch it up properly minus the secrets soon. :D
Yeah and waiting for next chapter. No pressure though. ^__^ -gives you chocolate again- XD
Awww so cute! You write such great filler, FIM! But yeah, I can relate. Taking refuge in other activities to escape the bad days. I read a lot of the time. But anyways, hopefully you'll have a better day after this
*throws Miki-in-a-box, with push-up bras and realistic groping action!*
*and a customized Piriri to Yukou outfit, and the bus from the PV*
*and some sparklers and all the H!P DVDs*
*and Miya and Saki*
Sweetness. I died.
“Well… she does happen to be rather attractive, doesn’t she…? If Maasa doesn’t manage to keep her from the theatre… then I might just have to steal her. Not only does it hurt our dear Sudou-chan… but I win a little bit more in the end as well.”
DIBS
Oh gosh ._.
Goshy, Goshy-gosh-gosh!!
;+; MAIHA WHY ARE YOU SO MEAN!!! >w<
Anyway, that was a good post >w<
That was indeedy, I feel bad for Airi ;+;
Poor, Poor, Airi...
WHY DO YOU HAVE TO BE EVIL LIKE THAT FIM!? *throws random stray cat at your head*
GO CAT-SCRATCH!!
But back to the story, No, No, No!!!~
They can't take Momo!! NoooooOOooo...MAASA SAVE HER!!!
O_O
And the last part..With Chinami...Split personality o_o
Holy crappers..
o_o...What's going to happen now?
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE POST POST POST POST
LONGER CHAPTERS!!!!!!!! I COMMAND YOU I COMMAN THEE!!!! *throws a pig at your head*
C'MON!!!~~
*pokes with mr. Pointy*
~UPDATE!~
Wow...Koha's crazy...and I feel sorry for Airi! Has to mask her true feelings in this, and she's just like a pawn to Koha...Ah well...
WHOO
*H!P in a box*
Hmmm, poor Airi. o_o
Chinami with a split personality! o_o
Too hungry and tired to reply properly. -hands you custom plushies of the Berryz-
Can't wait for more. :D
I live again! So much is just simmering beneath the surface here, waiting to explode. I almost can't take it.
“Well… she does happen to be rather attractive, doesn’t she…? If Maasa doesn’t manage to keep her from the theatre… then I might just have to steal her. Not only does it hurt our dear Sudou-chan… but I win a little bit more in the end as well.”
Oh woah, a sick and possibly twisted Koharu...... :nya:
Love it
And now a completely random, never before posted person appears onto the scene, to say:
WHEEE! I love this fic with all my heart. Koharu scares me, but I love pyros... and... and..... wheeeee! This is so cute!
*waves* hihi! :wriggly:
And yes, these emoshi-cons amuse me. That's right, emoshi-cons.
mou...[whimpers while waiting for the next chappy]
“Wait… you mean… You want me to sleep with you?”
I supposed it was more or less out of respect for my personal space, but it would have sounded awkward if I told her I didn’t mind her touching me. And, no, I wasn’t thinking about it like that, thank you very much.
She turned so that her back was facing me, and mumbled a quiet goodnight to me. I smiled, and whispered the same in reply to her, closing my eyes and letting the gentle rhythms of her breathing lull me to sleep.
She slid the window shut and wandered out of the apartment, taking care to make as little noise as possible to keep from interrupting her cousin’s sleep. After all… her cousin didn’t share her rock-like sleeping skills.
“I was only messing with you earlier, you know… I didn’t think you’d want to hang out with me when your friends were around, since it embarrassed you so much the first time…” Maiha started, stuffing her hands into the pockets of her jeans. Risako almost felt bad about getting angry at her… almost.
“Since you turned this whole thing into a game… I’ve decided that I’m going to play too.”
And just like that, Risako moved away from her, turning around to reenter the apartment building without another word… leaving Maiha there, stunned and somewhat disappointed.
…She never gave my jacket back, either.
DIBS <3
Ahh, a beautiful chapter. More Yurichina goodness! <3 And more MaihaKo love <3
Aww...Koma-chan's so sweet <3 Sharing her bed with Chinami ^^
*gives you a spa box, with berryz members doing different spa jobs, since they wanted to learn the value of work*
<3!
dibs
*sighs*
YurinaxChinami goodness...MORE I DEMAND MORE!!
IN FACT I DEMAND THEIR FIRST KISS!! COME ON >w<
And the MaihaxRisako >_>
I wanna know what happens next, tell me...
C'mon post faster, faster, faster
I NEED TO KNOW!!! >w<
I DEMAND MORE FLUFF, SCREW THE KOHARU DRAMA!!
XDXDXD
Update~
*prodding with Pointy sick of pointy doom*
Update~ O_O I COMMAND YOU~
Wooo! Another chapter!
I said this before, but I <3 Risako. She's just so adorable! ^^;;
I also love the whole first scene... Okay, I love the whole of the fanfic, but I love that scene the most. Chinami=kawaaaaii ^^
Hehehe the Risako/Maiha scene made me giggle. Risako will play this game too! Haha and the leather jacket...XD Something tells me Risako's going to treasure that jacket a lot secretly. XD
Awwww and Yurina/Chinami is cute. XD Man, Chinami really knows how to accidentally get hurt. o_o And they are sleeping in the same bed! <3 Cute. XD Now what will happen when next morning the girls come to look for Yurina and find Chinami in the bed too? XD
Looking forward to your next chapter~ -gives you a lollipop- I'm running out of gift ideas. XD Update soon~
I'm back.
:3Quote from: FeverInducedMadness“Wait… you mean… You want me to sleep with you?”
Haha, what the hell..QuoteI supposed it was more or less out of respect for my personal space, but it would have sounded awkward if I told her I didn’t mind her touching me. And, no, I wasn’t thinking about it like that, thank you very much.
Yes, Yurina.. I know you aren't .. Only the writer :3QuoteShe turned so that her back was facing me, and mumbled a quiet goodnight to me. I smiled, and whispered the same in reply to her, closing my eyes and letting the gentle rhythms of her breathing lull me to sleep.
Simple and cute description. No need exaggeration >_<QuoteShe slid the window shut and wandered out of the apartment, taking care to make as little noise as possible to keep from interrupting her cousin’s sleep. After all… her cousin didn’t share her rock-like sleeping skills.
Rock like, lol. So momo is water-like ? :pQuote“I was only messing with you earlier, you know… I didn’t think you’d want to hang out with me when your friends were around, since it embarrassed you so much the first time…” Maiha started, stuffing her hands into the pockets of her jeans. Risako almost felt bad about getting angry at her… almost.
Warning, fluffy road ahead!Quote“Since you turned this whole thing into a game… I’ve decided that I’m going to play too.”
And just like that, Risako moved away from her, turning around to reenter the apartment building without another word… leaving Maiha there, stunned and somewhat disappointed.
Somehow I smile contently reading this. A nice and brilliant turning point :3 Maiha is going down!Quote…She never gave my jacket back, either.
XDXD
I like this chapter..
:3
If I were Yurina, I probably would have gone up to chinami and slapped her, I hate getting scared like that. but good thing she didnt, and nursed chinami. Aww, thats a sweet Yurina though
Will we get a continuation of the YuChi sleeping scene? They're so sweet.
Go go Socko-o! Don't let Maiha have you so easily!
“AIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIEEEEEEEEE!”
“Wha- WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING, MAIHA!?!?”
“For your information, not one drop touched my lips yesterday, thank you very much.”
“Oh, I gave it to an angel and she neglected to return it to me…”
She was aware of Maiha’s eyes on her as she did so, and even though she could have cared less and would have walked around the house naked if there wasn’t always the possibility of one of the younger girl’s many love interests dropping in on them, it felt like the flirt was almost sort of studying her, and that was somewhat annoying.
“You’re my best friend. I forgave you the second I walked out of this house yesterday.”
…She was very beautiful when she was sleeping. Not that she wasn’t extremely gorgeous awake, but in that moment, it was as if she had become something very delicate… almost untouchable.
I snuggled closer to her, flinching as she stirred a little. I thought perhaps I had accidentally interrupted her sleep, but she merely held me tighter, a gentle smile crossing those graceful lips of hers. She whispered something, and at first I didn’t realize that she had been talking in her sleep.
…I smiled, closing my eyes to join her.
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There was a knock at the door, interrupting my lovesick state of mind. I sat up, puzzled.
I pouted against my will when the kisses stopped, and I felt my cheeks grow hot and a shiver ran down my spine as I looked up to see just how intensely she was staring back at me. Obviously, she hadn’t wanted to stop, either, but I had a feeling that she had pulled away for a pretty good reason…
Dibs xD
Aww, Maiha's sweet side xD And her horrific romantic side >_o My gahh, I wonder how those romantic interests put up with those 80's pickup lines xD
Chinami and Yurina turned my insides into skittles :3
Maasa is a completely different person when it comes to Momochi, eh? xD Completely disregarding all threats of hurt those days before :x... Oh well, it's cute and sweet anyway <3
Looking forward to the next chapters xD
-feeds you macaroni and cheese instead of acting my usual torturing self-
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DAMMIT DIBS! ><
Damn you Yuuyami!! >_<
Back to comment
That was overly sweet of Maiha..all sorry and stuff to maasa...A little tacky but still sweet o_o
I demand more RiixMaiha scenes >_>
I DEMAND MORE!!
The ChinamixYurina Was overkill >o<
I DIED YA' HEAR ME!?? DIED!!! D-I-E-D
READING THEIR SHORT BUT SO FLIPPIN' SUGARY SWEET PART!
And the MaasaxMomoko Oh god..
How is it possible to kill someone when you've already killed them!?
You drive me to the brink of insanity with your uber sweet stuff >_>
I should..like..find..an anti-sugar hard hat..so..I don't die...
Btw...*squirts blood*
TYPE MORE OR ELSE!! BUAHAHAHAHAHA!!
~update~
O_O
The whole Momo/Maasa reunion is just so........... :shy2: :nya: :luvluv2:
I can't even describe it in words. These icons for me is worth 1000 words.(I almost wrote 1000 bucks cuz I was thinking of that family guy episode) :)
for a sec I thought it was that psycho Koharu that grabbed Momo, praise the lord that it wasnt
nice update!
Awwww fluff! -dances around throwing confetti-
Best friend moment between Maiha and Maasa = XD!
Yurina/Chinami = :heart:
Momoko/Maasa = -DEAD- :heart: :heart: :heart: -flatlines again-
So sweeeeeet! Fluffy fluff fluff! -hands you sugar cookies- Too sweet! XD
Update soon~ :)
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:imdead:
Gosh, I can't keep up with the amount of updates! This has to be one of the most frequently updated fics I've ever read.
I hope Saturday occurs often! :heart: :heart: I can live with the angst as long as I know Saturday will come! FLUFF! ARGH! :imdead: (again, not that I was revived earlier) Maasa/Momoko = UNSTOPPABLE! TRY WHATEVER YOU WANT, KOHARU! IT WON'T WORK! >:D
Rofl, at the Yurina/Chinami scene, I half expected the girls to bust in and catch them snuggling XD. And Maiha/Maasa best friends scene totally wins too :heart:
I don't think I can think (and type) coherently right now, so I'll stop here :-\ I don't think my whole comment here was coherent at all ??? LOOK WHAT THIS FIC DID TO ME! But who cares, nothing wrong with being incoherent :D
Quote from: FeverInducedMadness"“AIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIEEEEEEEEE!”
“Wha- WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING, MAIHA!?!?”
Lol, a flashy entrance.. (well, not actually an entrance.. nvm.)Quote“For your information, not one drop touched my lips yesterday, thank you very much.”
She preserved the kiss :DQuote“Oh, I gave it to an angel and she neglected to return it to me…”
Maiha's angel <3QuoteShe was aware of Maiha’s eyes on her as she did so, and even though she could have cared less and would have walked around the house naked if there wasn’t always the possibility of one of the younger girl’s many love interests dropping in on them, it felt like the flirt was almost sort of studying her, and that was somewhat annoying.
o_o;;Quote“You’re my best friend. I forgave you the second I walked out of this house yesterday.”
I love this part T_T Maasa such a forgiving being... She made me feel bad..Quote…She was very beautiful when she was sleeping. Not that she wasn’t extremely gorgeous awake, but in that moment, it was as if she had become something very delicate… almost untouchable.
<3 X 100QuoteI snuggled closer to her, flinching as she stirred a little. I thought perhaps I had accidentally interrupted her sleep, but she merely held me tighter, a gentle smile crossing those graceful lips of hers. She whispered something, and at first I didn’t realize that she had been talking in her sleep.
*melting rapidly*Quote…I smiled, closing my eyes to join her.
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Damn, it ends.QuoteThere was a knock at the door, interrupting my lovesick state of mind. I sat up, puzzled.
I though the "other" part of Momo will awaken like before XD... look like "she" is busyQuoteI pouted against my will when the kisses stopped, and I felt my cheeks grow hot and a shiver ran down my spine as I looked up to see just how intensely she was staring back at me. Obviously, she hadn’t wanted to stop, either, but I had a feeling that she had pulled away for a pretty good reason…
I don't know what to say.. O_O;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;; "shivers"
Wow.. I really can't say any words.. <3 Later..
NOOOOOOO!!! You evil! You can't use W songs and not put W in the story! Bad bad bad! Bad!....
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......
BAD!
:luvluv2:
*wags tail happily* :luvuluvu:
can't wait til next chaaapppyyy...though i could never really keep up with all them updates ^_^;;
Bah, I'll use whatever songs I want. XD
And W IS in this story.
Nono's just the only one that has appeared yet.
I have PLANS for Aibon. PLANS. (Good plans. XD)
She was already in a crappy mood because Yurina hadn’t come along, but… to have to keep an eye on the accident-prone, life-endangering youngest member of the troupe was bound to wear on her nerves.
As soon as Erika turned back to face the younger female, she noticed that the girl was gone, and a jolt of fear shot up her spine. She was beyond dead if anything happened to Risako… beyond dead.
She shifted against me, turning her head to look at me with those brilliant eyes of hers, the faintest shade of crimson coloring her cheeks in a light blush. It was almost too adorable to handle, really… how it was possible for someone to be so cute, I’ll never understand.
I sighed, laying my head forward on her shoulder again. I needed to think more before I did things… Still, she seemed to relax at that, and I saw her smile a bit out of the corner of my eye as she turned her head to kiss me on the cheek.
Dibs xD
Airi = Assassin of doom?
Maimi and her gang eh? I'm assuming it's the rest of C-ute that were not introduced yet o-o. You killed two people, Airi?! o_O For your beloved master, right? I think that's cute :] (loves relationships like that) Anywho, what I find odd is that Koharu had wanted to enlist the help of people to do something... Which probably means whatever she's planning, it's big o_o;
Amusement park? I love the amusement park :D
I wonder where Risako went off to xD
Why do I get this sinking feeling that Erika's going to run into a bad doobie? >_>;
Momo and Maasa are cute as usual xD Song's lovely too :]
<3
-feeds you pasta-
<3
Were the two who died C-ute's? If so, yay! :P
Rawr, now samidare?
Nono's appearance was so tiny I almost forgot that she was there... lol.
Now when you say you have plans for Aibon, do you mean just Aibon and Nono fades into a life of obscurity? Or a Two Top combination plan?
Wow, vicious Koharu and killer Airi. o_o;
Am I weird if I say that a ruthless Koharu is kinda hot? XD
Momo! And Maasa! <3 I wonder what Momoko wants to show her? Hmm.
And oh yeah, I wonder what happens to Risako, and what of Erika who's trying to find her. -has a bad feeling-
Anyway, update soon! I'm totally running out of gift ideas. XD -hands you cheesecake- XD
Damn, the first part is scary. I'm glad Maimi survive the evil Airi attack .. If she dies .... I'm gonna kill you FIM!
And why Airi flee? I though she supposed to kill all of them? Hmm...
-Loser wrote stuff here and I read it and yay. :3-
Damn, did I have a blonde moment reading these chapters.
Sorry I missed the last one! Thought I reviewed it but apparently not. Anyways, I died repeatedly while reading this, like leaving a controller to shoot yourself repeatedly in a video game amount of dying. So sweeeeeeet! <3333333 But the fight made me want to kill Airi, and it takes me a LOT to turn on my second favorite C-ute member. And Sev would've taken care of Koharu for me xDDD.
*throws bigass box that folds out to a live of Otome Gocorro, members included*
*and comes with Sushi and pasta*
…I was right. I wasn’t cut out to perform this song.
…By myself.
“Oh, Sugaya-chan… You could have any of the girls in this city—not to mention the hordes of boys that would die to come within a foot of you—at your every beck and call in a second…”
Nyahahahahahaha~ XDXDXD
Drunk Risako is funny..But I have to wonder why is she drunk in the first place? hnn...
Seriously though, Is Maiha so much of a wimp that she has to hid in the closet until everything is good and done?
The fluff that is MaaMomo >w<
So cute, sooo *squeal* XDXD
And then the sadistic, grrr and arghh of Koharu >_>
Airin should like..Up and leave if...it weren't for the fact that she's attatched to Koharu and stuff...
Back to the point though!
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!!!!!
*Throws som rabies infested puppies*
UPDATE YOU STUPID CHILD RAWR!!!
Oh. Grah. Koharu. o_o
So sadistic. Mm. I somehow like her for it... o_o;;;
And I look forward to when Maasa returns to the basement to find a very drunk Risako there with Maiha. XD I think it's likely that many misunderstandings would follow. XD
Momo/Maasa fluff was nice. :D If only Momoko knew that Risako wouldn't have come back that night, so she could have just invited Maasa in. XD As it is, this way we'll get to see more interesting scenes. :)
Can't wait for your next update! -hands you ice cream- Mm :D
Lol, poor Maiha. Happy MaaMo, but ouch at Airi. Next please!
“Tell Ishimura that she still owes me 20,000 yen.”\
Wheee Yo-chaaaaaan!
This was a random yet awesome chapter! ^^;;
The seniors are gang/crime lords? o_o That's the impression I got from Maimi talking about Yossi, Rika, and Miki. XDDD
I like Maasa's and Maimi's friendship. XD Trying to out-insult each other...hey wait, that sounds familiar. :P Like Maki and Miki in mine. XD
Maiha owes Maimi money? Oh yeah, that was mentioned by Maiha before...something like that anyway...XD Can't wait to see what happens next. :D
Post soon~ :D
The plot thickens.
“Tell Ishimura that she still owes me 20,000 yen.”\
lol, what the hell did Maiha do
and :mon exhaust: Kanna and Saki survived. :)
God, I must really be losing my mind
I thought I commented here >_> But it looks like I didn't..until now
Anyway!
ok all C-ute members so far seem a-okay and breathing!
Well the ones we've seen so far..minus Airi..whose you know..bleeding and stuff >_>
I <33 the idea that a lot of the older members are gangsters! XD
Maiha must have done something >_>..20,000 yen? that's a lot of money *cough*
Anyways...
~ UPDATE
I get to say it !
Woo!
Ready, ready ready?
DUN DUN.... DUUUUUUUUM!
:kekeke:
Oh what do you have planned? hmm hmm? :dunno:
Guess there's only one way to find out, huh?
Da 'Bon is back!!
Kago = <33
Momoko + Kusumi = [lots of emoticons]
>_>...we both got really lazy....
Have you started on wordy's challenge yet? I didn't...=+=;;I'm dead...
<_< and I need to update on my own fic..DAMN!! O_O
Update~
"W00T! Momoko finally meets the psycho. Now the fun can begin
-stares at last line-
Two words: Oh shit.
Still looking forward to Risako waking up though. XD And I want to see what you let Koharu and Airi (I'm assuming that's Airi next to her, whatever the name. No one else is as crazy as to follow Koharu anyway. :P) do to Momoko. Mm.
Don't worry, soon is a relative term. I haven't updated mine either yet. >_< Just keep working at it! XD
So Maiha DOES have an uke side to her xDDDDD So cute how she was hiding in the closet and all xD Wonder what Risako would think had she still been awake through it all xD If only Risako knew... xD
Erika's panicking = <3
Glad to see the police trying to take action now <3 Detective Aibon... xD
Let's pray Momoko doesn't fall prey to Koharu x_o The Miracle Eyes have already gotten into her X___X; MAASA! GO SAVE YOUR LOVIE! ><!!!!!!
But I do wonder what Koharu has in store for Momo... Purposely trying to get into a relationship so that Momo would betray Maasa? Or somehow get Momo and Maasa to become enemies? Hmm. =-=
-feeds- Write more!
When I was younger, I remember going to the doctor once and hearing him say that I would die at an early age because of how stressed I let myself get all the timeThe doctor can just shove it >_> *cough*
Maybe I was just paranoid, but…Captain just..is awesome..
Something told me to keep an eye on her while she was with them.
…Just in case.
And so, she pulled it tight around her body and did the only thing that she could think to do at the moment.:on lol: :on lol: :on lol: :on lol: :on lol:
She screamed as loud as her lungs and throbbing head would allow her to.
It happened to be a shoe, and fortunately Maasa’s reflexes were better than most, even after only being awake for a minute or so, and thus she was able to drop down and avoid being hit. Maiha, on the other hand, was not as quick or as lucky, showing up behind Maasa just in time to get pegged in the head by the makeshift projectile. Risako had a good arm, and thus the force of it was enough to send her backwards to the floor.
Risako looked up again to see Maasa giving her a somewhat impatient, irritated look, and Maiha refused to meet her eyes, as if she was afraid to see any little indication that that was indeed what the younger female was thinking. And after a moment, the reason why suddenly dawned on Risako
She spotted Maiha’s jacket lying on the armrest of the couch and hesitated for a moment, biting down gently on her lower lip. It wasn’t really hers, regardless of whether or not Maiha seemed to miss it much, and yet she knew she could expect it to be freezing cold outside… even though if deep down inside she wanted to wear it for a much less practical reason than that.
Aw, screw this…
Risako slid into the jacket anyway, walking over to the room that the other girls had disappeared into, poking her head in
The flirt seemed to forget about her momentary discomfort in order to scowl a bit, adopting a slightly concerned tone that was somewhat uncharacteristic of her.
“You shouldn’t be out here… especially not alone… You could have really gotten hurt, Socko…”
“Mm, well…” Maiha felt her breath catch as Risako leaned in a bit, putting them in the same position they had been in several times before, after which she was always disappointed. “I guess it’s a good thing you were there, huh? It’s not so bad if I have you here to rescue me.”
And then, finally, the younger girl sealed those last few centimeters with a gentle kiss, and Maiha had to keep from pinching herself in order to make sure that she wasn’t dreaming. It was over quickly, and yet the sweetness of it all lingered, causing a goofy sort of grin to spread across the flirt’s lips.
Risako smiled impishly, pulling away and skipping out the door without another word.
But as far as Maiha was concerned, that was okay.
She had lost her ability to speak for the moment anyway.
it was really hard to leave my warm, cozy bed with Chinami dozing peacefully in my arms
And she seemed to take every opportunity that she could to be around a lot. Her parents only came by every so often to check up on the theatre, but she would always sneak in to watch the rest of us danceMaybe she wants to be part of the troupe =O
The sneaking came from the fact that Takahashi-san didn’t like interruptions during practice, and often times would kick Chinami out if she caught herAww, I can't help but feel bad and think of it somewhat cute at the same time <33
There were times when she was calmer and I found her approachable, and the two of us would talk so much that I often had to go without a lunch break. I didn’t mind that much, because she would always make it up to me by bringing in a snack afterwardsI'm melting!! I'M MELTING!!..--goo--
I felt thin arms wrap around my waist and a wiry form pressing against my back in a warm hug, and the momentary terror that had gripped me evaporated in that instant. I smiled, stopping what I was doing in order to place my hands on top of hers.:luvluv2: :shy1: :shy2: :nya: :wriggly: :luvluv1: :mon lovelaff: :mon inluv: :mon angel:
Chinami paused and stood up a bit on her toes so that she was peering over my shoulder now, and I froze as her cheek brushed against mine. I tried really hard not to blush, but it happened anyway, though as sleepy as my companion was I don’t think she seemed to notice. She was much more interested in the food.They need to kiss..They really do..I demand their kiss right now!
“Yo~ Yurina-channnnn… Ya home, lazy butt?”Miki-clone...>_> that was such a miki-excuse..
“Miyabi… That’s kind of rude, you know…”
“Aw, she knows I’m just playin’ around…”
“It’s not very funny… OW! Hey! Don’t poke me!”
“My hand slipped~”
I followed Erika’s curious gaze over towards the prodigy, who was looking at both with the most innocent expression that she could muster… a sign that something had obviously happened between her and our former troupe captain. She was determined to play the “I don’t know what you’re talking about” card, though, and blinked at us.XDXDXD
“What?”
“Well, there was a fireworks show afterwards, Kumai-chan. At least, I could see it going on from my house.”Lol Miyabi is lurve XDXD
“Ah~ well, then that’s a bit better.”
“Ugh, I swear… I hate it when you two get like this…”
“I don’t know… I just notice things, I guess… You get really quiet whenever she talks to me and you were kind of standoffish at first… I’m not going to steal her away or anything crazy like that, if that’s what you’re thinking.”=O Airi loves the psycho!!
I thought I could see a faint blush cross the other girl’s cheeks, but she recovered quickly, looking at me seriously.
“…It’s not like that… she and I… well… It’s just not like that.”Fimmy-chan~ You're evil...You need to update faster!
“But you want it to be?”
She grew quiet again and turned her head to stare out the window, carefully considering how to answer my question.
“…I’m afraid there’s just too much that you wouldn’t understand.”
“Some things don’t have to be so complicated, you know…”
“…And yet… some things just are.”
I dropped the topic then, turning to stare out the window with her as we waited for Koharu to come back.
If only I had known…
I had never slept through an entire day like that before. I hadn’t really thought it possible, considering the fact that I was really… more or less a prompt kind of person. I got up at the same time every morning, not a minute earlier or later.
I guess it came with a price, though… I hadn’t realized just how worn out I was. Plus… it was really hard to leave my warm, cozy bed with Chinami dozing peacefully in my arms.
I hummed gently to myself while I cooked, making sure to prepare enough just in case my guest happened to wake up and was hungry.
I felt thin arms wrap around my waist and a wiry form pressing against my back in a warm hug, and the momentary terror that had gripped me evaporated in that instant. I smiled, stopping what I was doing in order to place my hands on top of hers.
I heard a mumbled, sleepy response as she buried her head into my shoulder, and I giggled a little bit. How adorable…
Chinami paused and stood up a bit on her toes so that she was peering over my shoulder now, and I froze as her cheek brushed against mine. I tried really hard not to blush, but it happened anyway, though as sleepy as my companion was I don’t think she seemed to notice. She was much more interested in the food.
“Yo~ Yurina-channnnn… Ya home, lazy butt?”
I followed Erika’s curious gaze over towards the prodigy, who was looking at both with the most innocent expression that she could muster… a sign that something had obviously happened between her and our former troupe captain. She was determined to play the “I don’t know what you’re talking about” card, though, and blinked at us.
I want more luvin' :mon lovelaff:
Maybe she wants to be part of the troupe =O
Aww, I can't help but feel bad and think of it somewhat cute at the same time <33
I'm melting!! I'M MELTING!!..--goo--
They need to kiss..They really do..I demand their kiss right now!
Miki-clone...>_> that was such a miki-excuse..
Lol Miyabi is lurve XDXD
=O Airi loves the psycho!!
>_< unrequited love sucks ;_; so tragic..
Ahhh, new chapter <3
I was not lurking too! I just forgot to comment the first time I read it. XD
Yurina/Chinami <33333 Somehow the mental image of Chinami sitting in a tree makes me giggle. XD
Hmm, funny how Momoko picks up that Airi likes Koharu. XD I look forward to see what evil you can come up with soon. XD
And I second Loser's comment. YOU NEED TO UPDATE SOON! And it's not negotiable. XD
Love ya lots FIM-chan~ XD
Tell me the secret, dear kumai-chan~ :heart:
Kumai-chan is my favourite chef!
The flashback about Chinami is really sad T_T She is such a happy go lucky person and now... *sighs* Goddamn bastard need to be punish to hell!
:OO Superbeautifulovelyworthdyingfor scene! :imdead:
Lol, Miyabi. Why she still want to hide the obvious thing?
I hate koharu and kirarin o_o Maasa, go save Momo!
Thanks FIM for providing us with fluffy new chapter ! :3
Got three comments for the last chapter.
FIM-chan is saddened by that.
And because I can....DIBS (this does not count as double post because, yeah, I said so >D)
That said, Yurina/Chinami is <3333333 That kiss was a little unexpected, but sweet. <3
Chinami's POV is interesting, especially when she accidentally overhears all that. Koharu's logic unnerves me. It makes sense in a evil way, but she is totally scary. >_>
And the fact that Chinami thinks Miki talks and acts like a cat made me giggle...Catwoman? XDDD Judging from the content of Miki's and Koharu's conversation, Miki is like...a gang lord? XD Hehe. Along with Yossi and Rika....haha. 3 of the 85ers controlling the crime world. XDDD That's kind of hawt for some reason. XD Miki being evil and helping Koharu? Oh my. >_>
-wonders what will happen next- This is getting really fun! In a "omg what will happen next?!" way. I hope Chinami is alright. -twiddles thumbs-
Write on~ XD
Chinami! :O*gasp* I hope she'll be alright. I'm so glad to see this story updated! I'd been missing it for a while now.
Yay! Fim wrote another chapter! And, yay! Estrea posted it!
About a week ago I was listening to 'Samidare Koi No Uta' and for some reason kept thinking of Momoko. I had to put the song on repeat for almost twenty minutes before I finally remembered that scene from this fic. Then I got all excited and went to look for updates.(which of course weren't there) But now. . . Yay!
Oh! anditwasagoodchapterpleasewritemoreokthnxbye
Yay you updated!
Chinami's POV is nice. I like the way she describes Yurina in the beginning. ChinxYurina love rocks
Yeah, I'm a really bad commenter, and you don't have to respond to this comment of mine. lol, sometimes I feel that I have to leave respondable comments to fanfics, or at least good ones. I still love this story though
ABOUT DAMN TIME!!
Jesus, short or not it's still a chapter!
And you better update soon!
But the yurina/chinami scene was cute <33
Made me mushy >w<
Anyway update update update, hopefully i'll catch you on aim later~
Miyabi talking too much XD That I can believe :lol:
Wait a minute.... so Chinami's family owned the threatre before? :shocked:
Just when I thought I might have an idea why Koharu is so bent on ruining things for the girls, I come up against a wall after reading more. I need to knowwwwwwwwwwwwwww :banghead: :banghead: :banghead:
She watched as Maimi turned the gun over in her hands, an almost hesitant look starting to creep onto the gang leader’s face.
“…She needs some way of defending herself with where we’re sending her…”
DIBS~ :D After so long ;_;
Haha, Maimi's mad drawing skills "It looks like a foot to me..." Reina sure can sleep through anything xD. And awwww...the world needs SaKanna :D! YAY Yuko spaz :D. And Damn...Maimi's got a gun...RUN AWAY! All in all, fun chapter at the police station xD And yet again W screws somethin' up xD
Yay W! XDDD
Cos they're a great team. XD Poor Maimi and gang. Played like a flute. XDD
Kago gave Maimi the gun? o_o Interesting move. I hope Maimi will be fine when she goes out looking for information. Koharu doesn't look like someone who should be messed with. ._.
Anyway, happy to see you back yay! <3333 -huggles-
QuoteShe watched as Maimi turned the gun over in her hands, an almost hesitant look starting to creep onto the gang leader’s face.
“…She needs some way of defending herself with where we’re sending her…”
eeeek, never would I have thought of Maimi dealing with guns :shocked: Koharu can't be that dangerous....could she? A sick and twisted Koha is always fun to see. :twisted: lol.
Woah... that pencil flying into the wall :w00t: And Reina sleeping through all that XD
This police station is filled with interesting characters, lolz, it would be crazy being held as a criminal there :lol
You updated!! And I commented really late OMG!! >w<
Okay...I'll um...edit this one tomorrow night...since now I kinda' have to sleep for my early classes..yeah..
-will be edited..FOR SURE!! >;O -
Airin~”
A sing-song voice, one that was wildly out of place, pierced the girl’s hearing, and for a second she could think again… if only to process what was being said.
“The thing about burning houses, my dear one, is that you must escape them before they collapse on you, otherwise you won’t be around to do it again. If you’ve done your job, it’s time to leave.”