Hey Pharadox!
Very nicely done start you have here :yep: *gasp* Yossi dumps childhood friend and lover for an H!P member?? Sayaka probably just felt like her entire world was destroyed :cry: But at the same time, I'm really eager to find out who the girl Yossi met is :O
Anyway, you have a way of writing that just seems to flow and everything just fits together really well. You definately have a way with words that makes me want to keep reading!! :D *waits for update*
:stunned:
Ooh! Pharohs fic!
Its well written! It just goes and then you'll just want it to continue more. At first I thought Sayaka was 'Sayaka Ichii' but guess you cleared that out for me. Wow childhood friends huh? And then suddenly dumped. :doh: poor Saya.. I wonder who Yossie met... hmmm
I feel sad for Sayaka, but I'm also extremely curious. I wanna know who Yossi met! Sayaka seemed like she was really important to her, so this new person must be extremely important...
Keep it up! :grin:
Yossi = :pen_cry:
Sayaka = :mon runcry:
O.M.G!!!!! Where the hell have you been all my life? :love:
This story is AMAZING so far. The way you write is so intense, rich and full of detail! Being that I'm a HUGE 1444 fan that last chapter just KILLED ME XDXDXDXDXD KI-LL-ED ME! I haven't been this amazed by an Ishiyoshi Chapter like that in a good while. I love it to bits and pieces, I just wanna read and reread it over and over again untill i get bored. Not to mention that they way you described Rika falling in love was pure :inlove:.
What's funny is that today I was complain to a fellow author that I'm in the mood for a good romantic, passionate and maybe even epic Ishiyoshi scene. Glad to see someone deliver it!
I barely know you and I already :heart: you
KEEP WRITING! For my sake :'(
Is there really any other pairing but Yossie and Rika? It should have been obvious. :wub: Haha.
itsumo zutto issho yatta karaOsaka koi no uta??
kizukahen katta...
nande tooku ni itte moutan?
Is there really any other pairing but Yossie and Rika? It should have been obvious. :wub: Haha.
I couldn't agree more :gmon twirl:
You've gotten yourself another reader here. I'll definitely be watching this thread. The way you write Yossi and Rika falling in love is just so beautiful~ :gmon love2: great work!
Awww~! Ishiyoshi!! :heart: It's Rika-chan after all!
I swear, you make my day everyday!! :D
Yui's awkward entrance was awesome!Quoteitsumo zutto issho yatta karaOsaka koi no uta??
kizukahen katta...
nande tooku ni itte moutan?
I feel so sorry for Sayaka. I don't think she can go between Yossie and Rika.. :'(
Whether or not Sayaka can come between them, it doesn't mean she won't try...lol is that a hint of one of your future chapters? XD
Whether or not Sayaka can come between them, it doesn't mean she won't try...lol is that a hint of one of your future chapters? XD
Now we know who the new girl is... Rika! :otomerika:
Well, it isn't that hard to guess, really... As you said, it should have been obvious!
The last chapter started romantic and kinda sad, but it ended really funny!
Great chapter! Nice to see a new writer on board and to quote a certain someone... that ending "was priceless :pig laugh:
YUI! :on lol:
Crap. Sayaka really, REALLY had it bad for Yossi, didn't she? Possibly moreso than either she or Yossi realized. :cry:
Just want to say that I think of a certain Sayaka from a certain team K who is known to El-Ow-Vee-Ee :love: Yossi and admire her and all that stuff, so yeah, I like this pairing, but IshiYoshi is just meant to be :wub:
Keep writing cause you have another IshiYoshi fan reader :oops:
Huhuhu... Poor Sayaka.. :cry: Im sure someone else will turn up not as good as Yossie but yea..
Coz Ishiyoshi rules.. :heart:
Just saw this story, its awesome..... But it seems like Yoshi wants both girls. Can't she have both? Please? Its not that she doesnt like Saya, she just finds the new one more interesting, coz she's new. But she still loves Sayaka! Its pretty obvious. She didnt actually say she wanted to break up with her. Hmm, if this is anything like a fic I know, this is all a dream and then, she will wake up (or not) and everything may be fine. But who knows? Btw, I totally get the goofing off thing, writing an angsty one meself. THough I don't think ppl find it as interesting as yours..... Oh well, cya. Keep up the good work! It's great so far, though I do feel really sory for Sayaka, and Yoshi. But it seems like Sayaka is destroyed by that.....Will she bounce back? The pessimist in me says NO! The optimist says she will hook up with a character soon to be revealed, or Yoshii or both or Yoshi and Rika or Yoshi/ Rika and the other char....OR even more ppl, etc.;...... You know what I mean, just, be happy Sayaka! Im taking a leaf out of that pplz page (cnt remember whose) and being optimistic, so saying she WILL be HAPPY in the end! (Sory, I have a very open mind, things just rub of on it easilly......)
^Sweeet :rofl:, your comments are only! XD
Back to the story, O.O.... dude, Sayaka is ridiculously EMO!....I love it!
Again love how you write :inlove:
And yes i'll be patient :)
:mon scare: Wow... Sayaka reminds me of KOREAN DRAMA angsty... it's almost unbearably. I've never read a fanfic that makes my eyes waters but if this continues the way it is... I think this one just might be the first.
:cry: Good Job! *awaits next chatper*
I agree with Anammm (my ishiyoshi partner in crime XD) I like that SayakaXYossy but 1444 4 EVA
As a guy totally secure in his masculinity, I have no trouble proclaiming that Yossi DOES look dead sexy in a suit.
:wriggly:
Tilting her lips toward Hitomi’s ear, she lightly kissed the soft flesh of her earlobe and whispered, “Do you know why I fell in love with you, Yossie…?”So Yossie still wants Sayaka too huh? :? Rika sounds like its ok with her though so I think thats kinda good maybe? XD
“I fell in love with you because, no matter how many strong fronts you put up or how much you turned even the saddest situation into an opportunity to tell a joke, all I had to do to know your true feelings was look into your eyes. There, I could see how much you really cared… about everyone and everything. Your heart is the biggest I’ve ever known and it has room for so much love.” She paused and touched the tips of her fingers to Hitomi’s cheek, guiding her eyes to meet her own. “I know that you love her, Yossie. That’s never been a problem for me. I only hope that, in time, she will see there is room for both of us in your heart…”
Hitomi’s eyes filled with emotion, yet a small, coy smile crept across her lips as she asked, “Do you know why I fell in love with you, Rika…?” She pressed gentle kisses, light as leaves cascading from treetops to the ground below in the fall, across the line of Rika’s jaw.
“Because I think you’re dead sexy in a suit?” Rika quipped, giggling and wriggling at Hitomi’s side as the touch of lips so softly against her skin brought her flesh sensitively alive.
“Other than that.” Hitomi mimicked, a smirk momentarily crossing her features. “I fell in love with you because I realized, when I’m with you, I don’t need to put on any fronts or tell any jokes to hide my feelings. You take me as I am, broken, whole, split in two… the way no one in my entire life had before you came into it.”
^ It'd be even better if she'd say that you didn't have to give up the other H!P girls just for her. :twisted: :drool:
I can't decided what makes me like you more... your writing or the fact that you post so quickly :heart: Most likely a combination of the two XD.
That was a great chapter... the ending of it was hot XD... and the "reasons" for liking each other was so genuine...
Gah i can't get enough of you writing this couple... I just LOVE IT!
On a separate note: Not only yossy looks good in a suit... Rika looks super hot as a prince ;)... Rika-Franz FTW.
awesome~
So Yossie still wants Sayaka too huh? :? Rika sounds like its ok with her though so I think thats kinda good maybe? XD
Yossie and Rika are so perfect that they can be great being a guy or a girl.. :wub:
Ahh~ :luvluv2: i feel so warm and tingly inside... so much love :heart:
That was a very sweeeeet chapter!! :inlove:
“Because you think I’m dead sexy in a suit?”XD XD XD Had me rofling like there was no tomorrow!
OHMYGAAAAAWD.
Finally caught up with this! :oops:
It seems like Sayaka had practically built her entire life around Yossi. Yossi WAS her life, and when Yossi took herself out of that, Sayaka was left with nothing :cry: Had Yossi not joined MM, would her life also just be Sayaka?? :? It seems like it's hard for Yossi to forget Sayaka, and just how much she loves her. She probably wishes that she didn't have to do that to Sayaka, even though at the same time she wants to be with Rika ;) Bah, you write an awesome complicated story! My hat's off to you! :P
And LOL atQuote“Because you think I’m dead sexy in a suit?”XD XD XD Had me rofling like there was no tomorrow!
Wow your hand-writing is neat and rounded. I like it! :lol: Its not bad at all.. :D
I like your writing, it's really neat and you can make out which letter is which which is more than I can say for a bunch of ppl I know from my school that make me wonder how they ever got to this grade.....
And you have been hinting at the same thing all this time and even though some ppl will say otherwise I am actually good at picking up subtle hints. So yeah I got what you are saying about Yoshi and Sayaka. Lol, I thought you meant Ichii Sayaka so I was like wth? she is famous too, and rich I would assume..... anyway now that I know its another, and that she has nothing to do with MM then an "Ohhhhh" is in order. But I am still gonna try to imagine Sayaka Ichii in my head..... Its just the way it has to be in my head..... Sory.
umm and btw Whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy? Poor Sayaka! But now that I know shes not a HP member I just kinda feel like I prefer Yoshi with Rika. But I am a bigger YoMako shipper just so ppl know and mark my words, One day, I will write a YoMako story, and while I have breath in my body and am able to move, this promise stands! (Wow I went all prophet-16thC-Shakespeare-writer thingit there..... COOL!) XD C YA
Despite the possibility she might not be playing with a full deck, he couldn’t deny, as his eyes scanned the length of her body, the cards she did have were lovely. Her raven black hair fell in gentle waves about her heart-shaped face and across her slim neck. Dark, lush black lashes lay perched upon her flushed cheeks like the silken wings of a resting butterfly. What captivated him most about this creature, however, were her delicate, rounded lips, parted as if in a perpetual sigh.Hey! Stop falling in love with a girl you just saw on the street! Even though she's pretty and all.. XD
Squatting at her side, he hesitated a moment, debating on whether or not to wake her, before he gently tapped her shoulder with a single finger. In response she flinched in her sleep and wriggled her nose, a tiny, incomprehensible noise falling in protest from her lips. At this, his heart flipped a somersault in his chest and he couldn’t keep a smile from suddenly leaping to his face. She was precious when asleep, potentially crazy though she may have been.Tsk. Tsk. He sounds like he's having a 'love at first sight' thing going on. Oohh.. lips.... :drool:
As she settled once more, he hesitated again to wake her, but his conscience would not allow him to leave even a crazy girl to sleep on cold concrete. He laid, this time, his full hand on her shoulder and rocked her gently, persistently, until she began to stir. Her eyelids parted and she blinked quickly several times, gathering whatever senses she may have.
Very suddenly and in a matter of seconds, her eyes took in the shadow of his hunched form cast over her body by the moon, she felt the hand warm on her shoulder, and bolted immediately upright. Their heads collided like the crack of metal against stone and he toppled backward, arms flailing as if he might flap, sprout wings and fly away like a spooked bird.That's right! Threaten the guy! Even though you just woke up on the street and all! Its self-defense! Lol, poor dude though. :D
Sayaka tore her shoe off and jumped to her feet, brandishing the footwear at him like a knife. “Pervert!” She thrust the heel of her shoe in his direction-- where e lay sprawled on his back across the sidewalk, which occurred to him was an amusing, ironic turn of events-- both eyebrows raised high on her forehead. “I dare you to try something. I just dare you.”
He gawked, open-mouthed, as she waved the heel at him in as threatening a manner as she could possibly muster. “Me? ME? I wasn’t the one asleep on the sidewalk!” He side-glanced at his watch, smirked, and added “At 12:36 AM, no less. Frankly, it seemed a bit suspect to me. And now that I find myself threatened with death by heel, I can see quite clearly how correct my suspicions were.” He pushed himself up onto his feet, and looking down from his full height, realized at once how tiny this strange girl actually was. Her head couldn't possibly have come to much higher than his armpits, if even that.You tell her dude! Yep, that's what it is. That she's you know what right?! XD
Sayaka paused mid-wave of heel, her arm frozen in the air. A look of honest consideration of what he’d just said flew across her face for a fraction of a second before her eyes narrowed and she jutted the heel at him again. “And you? What are you doing wandering the streets at this time of night?” She tilted her head to the side and raised a single brow in question.Hey... yeahh.. What is he doing out and about at that time???
“I think that much is obvious by now.” He said simply, shrugging his shoulders non-committally. “I’m going about waking up crazy women that sleep on the sidewalk.”Oh no he didn't! Crazy women?! :O You made poor Sayaka sad now.. :cry:
Her jaw fell open and she stared at him in appalled silence. Snapping her mouth closed at last, a cloud was suddenly blown across her face, transforming the expression in her eyes from one of alarm, outrage, and distrust to one of heart-broken resignation. “I’m not crazy.”
Seeing this sudden sadness sweep across her face, he felt something deep inside his heart twist into knot after knot, tangling in a complication of feelings a complete and total stranger had somehow created within him. Stepping forward tentatively, he looked into her eyes and smiled kindly. “Well… maybe you could prove it if you’d stop pointing that admittedly concerning heel at me and let me put you in a taxi home for the night?”He sounded more like a pervert when he said 'put you in a taxi home for the night'. ;) Hah, you can't take her on a taxi! She lives right there! At the house next door! Wherever that is. :sweatdrop:
“Oh…” She brought the heel finally at bay at her side and he could see the defenses in her eyes begin to crumble. “That seems fair. Except,” she gestured over her shoulder at the house next door and grimaced, “I live right there.” An embarrassed flush rose in her cheeks, but she shrugged it off, unwilling to appear vulnerable in front of a stranger that had yet to entirely prove he was not, in fact, a pervert
He starred at her incredulously, as if she might sprout a second head or spontaneously clone herself. “You live right there and you couldn’t walk the last two or three feet to your own bed?”Oh no, he had to go there... Poor Sayaka... She must've wanted to go in there really badly though.. It's just really painful... :cry:
Sayaka glanced over her shoulder, her eyes falling with longing upon the house she had been found asleep in front of, and shook her head slowly. “No… I couldn’t.”
lol me too! i'm more of an Ishiyoshi fan. :heart: i wouldn't say the others are not a good pair but Ishiyoshi is Ishiyoshi! :wub:I like your writing, it's really neat and you can make out which letter is which which is more than I can say for a bunch of ppl I know from my school that make me wonder how they ever got to this grade.....
And you have been hinting at the same thing all this time and even though some ppl will say otherwise I am actually good at picking up subtle hints. So yeah I got what you are saying about Yoshi and Sayaka. Lol, I thought you meant Ichii Sayaka so I was like wth? she is famous too, and rich I would assume..... anyway now that I know its another, and that she has nothing to do with MM then an "Ohhhhh" is in order. But I am still gonna try to imagine Sayaka Ichii in my head..... Its just the way it has to be in my head..... Sory.
umm and btw Whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy? Poor Sayaka! But now that I know shes not a HP member I just kinda feel like I prefer Yoshi with Rika. But I am a bigger YoMako shipper just so ppl know and mark my words, One day, I will write a YoMako story, and while I have breath in my body and am able to move, this promise stands! (Wow I went all prophet-16thC-Shakespeare-writer thingit there..... COOL!) XD C YA
I don't know why but I just never got into YoMako or YoMiki or Yomaki. It's always been just Rika and Yossie for me. :)
I'm glad you're enjoying my fanfic and I hope you continue to! :) Thanks for reading!
I drew a rough sketch of how that would have gone
finally, an update...
Rika is awesome here... Yossui slips in her sleep (pun intended)...
thank you for keeping your promise!!! :cow:
wooohooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!! tortured Yoshi!!! Now she is starting to understand! Why does this seem like a "Diary of a Mad Black Woman" Kind of story? Where Sayaka (ICHII) is the wimin and the bad husband is Yoshi and the new dude might be Miki or something..... AWESOME! Please update soon@.@
Why does this seem like a "Diary of a Mad Black Woman" Kind of story? Where Sayaka (ICHII) is the wimin and the bad husband is Yoshi and the new dude might be Miki or something..... AWESOME! Please update soon@.@Huh? But it isn't Sayaka Ichii though.. right?? lol, Its funny Sayaka was suppose to be Yossie's name but was changed to Hitomi.. XD
Finally, her eyes fell on the silhouetted body next to her in bed and she slipped her arms around it, pulling it close. Nestling her head against the soft, pliant warmth of the body as it stirred next to her, she murmured softly, “Go back to sleep, Saya... It was just a nightmare.”Uh-oh.. :O
Rika paused visibly a moment, the thoughts that she wanted to put into words churning within her eyes as she did. Finally, she nodded and said in a very matter-of-fact way, “I think you should go see her in the morning… it’s obvious that you need to speak to her, Yossie.”Oh phew~ She didn't get mad..
Hitomi could have sworn in that moment that when she’d said Sayaka’s name, Rika had heard and chosen with all the beautiful compassion in her heart to let the moment pass as if it had not happened at all. Suddenly, as it had every day they’d known each other, her love for Rika grew beyond the limits she was always sure must have already been reached and proved there were not really any limits at all.Aww.. This is so cute.. :wub:
It's not Sayaka Ichii, but I wish it was and imagine her when I read Sayaka so...yeah, that's why I write it. But I know perfectly well it's not her. But that was a good chapter. It just shows how much of an indesicive heartbreaker she is. She already broke Sayaka now she is hurting Rika with her stupid second thoughts.
Awesome~ Update! :w00t: Its been a month.. but very satisfying.. :)QuoteWhy does this seem like a "Diary of a Mad Black Woman" Kind of story? Where Sayaka (ICHII) is the wimin and the bad husband is Yoshi and the new dude might be Miki or something..... AWESOME! Please update soon@.@Huh? But it isn't Sayaka Ichii though.. right?? lol, Its funny Sayaka was suppose to be Yossie's name but was changed to Hitomi.. XDQuoteFinally, her eyes fell on the silhouetted body next to her in bed and she slipped her arms around it, pulling it close. Nestling her head against the soft, pliant warmth of the body as it stirred next to her, she murmured softly, “Go back to sleep, Saya... It was just a nightmare.”Uh-oh.. :OQuoteRika paused visibly a moment, the thoughts that she wanted to put into words churning within her eyes as she did. Finally, she nodded and said in a very matter-of-fact way, “I think you should go see her in the morning… it’s obvious that you need to speak to her, Yossie.”Oh phew~ She didn't get mad..QuoteHitomi could have sworn in that moment that when she’d said Sayaka’s name, Rika had heard and chosen with all the beautiful compassion in her heart to let the moment pass as if it had not happened at all. Suddenly, as it had every day they’d known each other, her love for Rika grew beyond the limits she was always sure must have already been reached and proved there were not really any limits at all.Aww.. This is so cute.. :wub:
I like this fic cause it's about time that Rika doesn't become a jealous girlfriend or a misfortunate girl who ends up getting hurt because of unrequited love.. Hope i dont jynx it though... :sweatdrop:
I like your writing, it's really neat and you can make out which letter is which which is more than I can say for a bunch of ppl I know from my school that make me wonder how they ever got to this grade.....
And you have been hinting at the same thing all this time and even though some ppl will say otherwise I am actually good at picking up subtle hints. So yeah I got what you are saying about Yoshi and Sayaka. Lol, I thought you meant Ichii Sayaka so I was like wth? she is famous too, and rich I would assume..... anyway now that I know its another, and that she has nothing to do with MM then an "Ohhhhh" is in order. But I am still gonna try to imagine Sayaka Ichii in my head..... Its just the way it has to be in my head..... Sory.
umm and btw Whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy? Poor Sayaka! But now that I know shes not a HP member I just kinda feel like I prefer Yoshi with Rika. But I am a bigger YoMako shipper just so ppl know and mark my words, One day, I will write a YoMako story, and while I have breath in my body and am able to move, this promise stands! (Wow I went all prophet-16thC-Shakespeare-writer thingit there..... COOL!) XD C YA