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« Reply #60 on: February 06, 2007, 12:25:26 AM »
I feel Eri is on someone's order to help Yossi escape... can't really imagine Eri being someone bad, but it'll be a nice change if she is.

Looks like Yossi will be 'settling down' in this world until she gets reunite with Kaoru. Frankly speaking, chapters 3&4 were really confusing for me but with this newer chapter, things are falling in place. (I'm slow XD)

The dead Yossi & Aya aren't blood related... so... they might be lovers?

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« Reply #61 on: February 06, 2007, 02:01:15 AM »
Yeah, that was unexpected. I, like everyone else, was expecting there to be an intimate relationship between Aya and Yossi, but this is something just as deep or deeper. I think Eri's trustworthy. But, I'm just being biased. xD

LOL @ "I promise I won't try to kill anyone . . ." xD

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« Reply #62 on: February 06, 2007, 07:31:58 AM »
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“I promise I won’t try to kill anyone” answered the younger, joking.
That's cute...and scary.


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At least now, she had someone to trust.
Or DOES she??? :o

Dun dun DUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUNNNN!!!



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The dead Yossi & Aya aren't blood related... so... they might be lovers?
That might be pushing theory a little too far in this case...considering the fact that there are several references where they say that Yossi and Aya were like "sisters" (Aya at least, thought of Yossi as a sister) and that they grew up together.

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« Reply #63 on: February 09, 2007, 05:19:32 PM »
some people really want Aya to be in love with Yossi, ne? XDXD
If there's something I can say is that non of the girls are the bad guys here. Remember the monsters? They're the bad guys... or.., maybe there's someone else?:ONwahaha:
I'm working on the next chapter. It's still half writen and I don't know if I'll be able to finish it today.. maybe tomorrow

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« Reply #64 on: February 10, 2007, 05:55:10 PM »
yeh...aya and yossui would be cool ^^

love the story len. Keep it up

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« Reply #65 on: February 11, 2007, 12:00:20 AM »
Maybe someday I'll write about it, Mikan... someday.. XD


6




The waiting was starting to be unbearable and the weariness began to overcome her. But Yossi had told herself that she couldn’t sleep ‘cause Eri could return at any moment. Maybe, after all, it was better to not have a watch to count the seconds.

When the hopelessness was almost taking control over her, the door opened.

“Put this on”

Eri left a pile of clothes on the floor for Yossi to use them while she was checking that nobody had followed her.

“What’s that?!” exclaimed the older when she saw something under the clothes.
“You hadn’t really thought to go outside at night without protection right?”
“But this?” asked Yossi waving a katana in the air “It wouldn’t be better some kind of gun or something?”
“Bullets don’t kill them and a gun is useless in a hand-to-hand fight”
“Oh… But…”
“Stop asking. We have to go”


***

    

“Where are we going?”
“Ssshh…”

Eri hadn’t said anything since they left the room. Of course, it was a measure to avoid that anyone could hear them leaving, but Yossi wondered a few times if there was something else. Maybe she’d judge that girl too fast. Just because she was like the Eri she knew it didn’t mean that she had to be trustworthy at all…

After a few minutes, they finally reached what it seemed to be the exit, but before they could go outside, they’d have to get rid of something. The guard.

“Wait here”

From the corner where Yossi was hiding herself, she couldn’t recognize the girl at the door, but hers was a distinct voice.

“Eririn, you shouldn’t do this. You know it’s dangerous”
“Wouldn’t you do the same for Hitomi-san?”
“Of course I’d do, but she…”
“She’s her, Sayu” stated Kamei “If you look at her eyes you can see her…”

Sayumi seemed doubtful for a moment… until she saw a ghost walking towards them.

“She’s…”
“I told you” said Eri when Yossi arrived “Now, can we go?”
“Ok. But please…” Sayu took Eri’s hands worried “…be careful”

Kamei nodded and give a reassuring smile to her friend who stayed at her place while the two girls went to the exit.


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They were walking outside for almost thirty minutes already and they didn’t say a word. Yossi was still hesitating to talk but there was so much questions in her head that she reached a point that she had to let it out.

“Why are you doing this?” she asked almost whispering.
“Because I know you’re saying the truth”
“How?”

Kamei didn’t answer this time. Just turned to her and, in silence, pointed to a near building hidden in the shadows of the night.

It was a temple and, remembering how the city was, Yossi was surprised to see something still standing up. Through the years, even with whatever that happened to the city, that ancient shrine had survived over the glass titans that ruled the skies of Tokyo.

“They should be here already…” said Eri a bit worried.
“Who?”

Both girls reached the end of the stairs where, according to Kamei, someone should be waiting for them. But there was just the clearing in front of the temple entrance, illuminated by a faint moonlight.

Standing there, Yossi suddenly felt something…

“I don’t like it… don’t kno…”

Then, as if a sixth sense warned her, she took the hand that was trying to catch her from behind and, with a fast movement, she knocked down the aggressor.

“No doubt, it’s her”

Lying in the ground, a surprised Nozomi was rubbing her sore back while Yossi stared at her still trying to process what happened.

“It seems that our little time-traveler was saying the truth…”

Yoshizawa didn’t need to turn to recognize the owner of that voice immediately.

Slowly, as if she was measuring each step she took; a slender silhouette appeared from the shadows and walked towards the clearing, letting the moonlight to cover her body with a mysterious aura.

From the feet to the head, Yossi watched every detail of that woman. From the rough boots, the thigh leather trousers and the shirt showing her curves, to the scar across her right eye and cheek.

“Why I always end being the guinea pig?” complaint Nono while Eri was helping her to stand up.
“Because you wouldn’t be a great loss”
“Someday, someone will believe that you say that kind of things seriously, Miki” said another voice.

As if the presence of that stunning Fujimoto Miki wasn’t enough, the staging of another person emerging from the shadows made Yossi’s heart stop for a moment.

“Rika…”


To be continued...

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« Reply #66 on: February 11, 2007, 12:34:37 AM »
Battle-scarred Miki? Damn that's hot. :yep:

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« Reply #67 on: February 11, 2007, 01:08:49 AM »
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Slowly, as if she was measuring each step she took; a slender silhouette appeared from the shadows and walked towards the clearing, letting the moonlight to cover her body with a mysterious aura.

From the feet to the head, Yossi watched every detail of that woman. From the rough boots, the thigh leather trousers and the shirt showing her curves, to the scar across her right eye and cheek.


Such an entrance! :drool:

I'm starting to think that in this other world, Yossi was also the leader, while Miki was the sub (leader). So, with Yossi gone, it'd make sense for Miki to be in charge...


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As if the presence of that stunning Fujimoto Miki wasn’t enough, the staging of another person emerging from the shadows made Yossi’s heart stop for a moment.

“Rika…”

And just when I thought it couldn't get any hotter, Rika shows up. :heart:

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« Reply #68 on: February 11, 2007, 01:45:19 AM »
Damn. Battle scars are hot!

But Miki's hot anyways. XD

But, poor Tsuji. D:

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« Reply #69 on: February 11, 2007, 02:00:24 PM »
What JFC said...
and Amarghetta...
and black velvet...

nothing to add from me there XD
except: can't wait for the next chapter!

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« Reply #70 on: February 11, 2007, 05:51:36 PM »
I quote Coachie. Lol

Man, A battle scared Aya is pretty hot too (thinks back to Sukebans open scenes Aya) Dude, was that awesome or what? Or am I the only one who thinks so.

Well, this story seems to be growin nicely. I would love to see some fan art. ^^

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« Reply #71 on: February 11, 2007, 08:30:15 PM »
Yeah, Miki and Rika :yay:

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« Reply #72 on: February 11, 2007, 09:09:51 PM »
Hmm, I wonder if this Rika has the same personality of the Rika Yossie knows o_o; If it's another Charmy-the-bitch, I'ma slap you Len xD!

I agree with everyone too. Battle scarred Miki is hawt.

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« Reply #73 on: February 11, 2007, 09:50:35 PM »
@ JFC, Amarghetta, black, coachie;

Miki would be hot even with a trash bag XDXD

@MyDearYossi;

Yay! XD and more yay! in next chapters!

@Mikan;

The Aya in this world is Subekan mode Aya too, just like Miki XD

@Yuu-chan;

No need to be rude... There's no bitchy Rika here, but you have to admit that she was really hot in WLH XD


About the Mikan's fanart suggestion.. well, I have to say that I'm pretty bad at drawing. So, if someone's interested I'll accept any contribution :P

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« Reply #74 on: February 11, 2007, 10:14:04 PM »
I like the concept of this story ^.^ Strange and usual, in the good way, stories are my favorite (not to mention the Miki hotness mentioned before)

I'm anxious to see where you go with it...Im vedy impatient XD I want more!

Plus...bonus points for Eri in it d(^-^)b

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« Reply #75 on: February 11, 2007, 11:51:29 PM »
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@ JFC, Amarghetta, black, coachie;

Miki would be hot even with a trash bag XDXD



I can sooooooooo imagine that!
Yes! She's HOT! :D

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« Reply #76 on: February 12, 2007, 02:55:46 AM »
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“Why I always end being the guinea pig?” complaint Nono while Eri was helping her to stand up.
“Because you wouldn’t be a great loss”


Maybe that's what happened to this timeline's Kago!  :P

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« Reply #77 on: February 12, 2007, 05:06:37 AM »
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@ JFC, Amarghetta, black, coachie;

Miki would be hot even with a trash bag XDXD
Especially if that was the ONLY thing she had. :jerk: :drool:

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« Reply #78 on: February 12, 2007, 06:33:58 AM »
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@ JFC, Amarghetta, black, coachie;

Miki would be hot even with a trash bag XDXD


Uhm, I'm actually picturing it... But it should be a really small bag, or at least kinda translucent. :P XD

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« Reply #79 on: February 12, 2007, 07:27:45 AM »
ok.. blame Mikan for requesting it XD
it's an attempt of battle Miki.. of course, there's anything that remembers Miki at all, sorry :ONdepressed:



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