LoyalFlutist's AdviceAfter reading everyone's post up above, I suppose I could drop some of my own advice and stuff to what I do on a daily basis when I'm prepared to write my fictions. I'll also include certain concerns I always think of in regards to the fan fiction universe with my opinions.
1. Ceasing to continue fictionsOkay, this hasn't happened to me in this fandom (thank god for that), but I had that happened so many times in another forum when I started off for the second time after a a long hiatus with writing back three years ago. There are series that I have promised to continue updating yet they will forever be abandoned and sitting in the blackest pit of my brain, never to be heard of ever again. Worse, I probably don't even remember why I should continue on; uninterested in my plot alone.[Edited statement as of 10/02/21]: spoiler alert, this has happened to me. Perhaps I should be listening to my advice more...
It's hard. There are instances when we lose motivation to write or even lose any sort of ideas to progress the fiction smoothly from beginning to end; especially with fiction that is longer than twenty chapters long and has no sort of ending in sight! But the worst thing that any writers hate to face is seeing the lack of updates on a specific work or two extend its time range. Days turn to weeks, weeks turn to months, and months soon turn into years. Maybe because it's too long; maybe because we are beginning to lose enjoyment writing that sort of plot (which I must ask why you are writing it in the first place); maybe because you just want to stop and write something new with a fresh start. Whatever the reason may be, although it's highly unlikely readers will like it, we will respect the decision of discontinuing. Although it's encouraged to wrap it up, a messy wrap is even worse than not wrapping it up at all!
Personally, I would at least keep the plot short in order to avoid this crisis. Short and simple is most satisfying for us writers and easy to maintain without much worry. If it's going to extend past ten chapters, then start putting on your yellow hat and tackle your way through the plot till the very end. If giving up the series is the best choice at this point despite keeping it on hold for a long period of time, then it's technically a good idea to keep in mind with the next series to try to finish it to the very end. Adventures through the romantic progression of double Matsui or an angst ending of Yuria's and Kumi's rough childhood is usually the most pleasurable when the conclusion is made. And like the previous writers' advice from above, always respect your readers!
2. Maintaining multiple fictionsNow many of you know at this point I have four on-going fictions and two that are on a slow, but active, update. Not to mention the multiple one shots I'm juggling along with the other fictions only assisted by one brain and two hands.
Sounds a lot, right?
Of course it is! I myself am 100% sure that I'm rarely going to have a chance to sit down and type with my ideas the entire day! And I too am sure that writers out here won't even bother doing that. We all have a life and we need to tend to our health and needs. I sometimes even wonder why the hell I created a huge workload over the top of my head with other important life events.
Now each of us have our own ways of keeping up to date with our fictions. Some of us with three on-going fictions would like to evenly distribute updates with chapters for each one. Some would try to get rid of one on their list in order to focus mainly on the other two. Some would just update whatever fictions they have the most idea with at that current time. Whatever it may be, I personally recommend that it's best to evenly distribute the fictions. Though I have two other fictions that aren't on top of their game in terms of recent uploads, it's best to make note and tell them to the readers if you'll be taking your time and focusing on whichever fiction(s) you desire. The last thing we want is readers not knowing why "Hidden Truth" didn't even release a second chapter in months compared to the main four fictions I'm keeping focus on!
Since I had also asked this in the thread of Fan Fiction Discussion not too long ago, I did keep in mind to also revisit the plot of certain fictions. Switching one fiction to another with two plots that can't even be remotely related to each other is one easy ticket to getting the wrong idea with certain fictions in mind. If one were to write about pirates fighting each other to the death and romantic school comedic with multiple cliche scenario as two separate fictions, it can be quite embarrassing if a chapter about Mayu suddenly shifted from loving Jurina to killing her in merely one update! Always look back and be sure that you're refreshing your memories of the story's structure. That way not only will the readers be in a good mood but also avoid making you accidentally making any sort of mistakes in regards to your organization.
3. How can I type my fiction faster?Alright, on a physical standpoint, you should attempt to touch type fast. I'm not trying to brag, but a small explanation to how fast I update to my luxury sometimes is thanks to how rapid I type (100 wpm on average). Not only do I spend less time staring at the bright screen of my laptop's and burning a hole on the frontal lobe of my brain but I also am able to deliver more out to my readers. It helps that when I think of a word, I'm able to instantly put it on the screen to my desire. So it's of your best interest to probably find some typing program online and hone your fingers to get use to touch typing on the keyboards if they haven't already. Although one will start off slow and might only go as fast as 15 wpm, with constant practice and years of experiences, you'll end up typing a decent sentence before you even get a chance to say 'wut!?' Even better, a 100 word drabble of AtsuYuu below five minutes with a great plot!
Now on a mental standpoint, you have to be sure of what comes next with your plot. Plan ahead and try to at least make a small timeline in regards to your storyline. Like one of the previous writers' advices up above, a story has a beginning, middle and end. With that in mind, you'll be easily tossing in what to fill in between the three main checkpoints of your fiction.
4. I'm unable to type my fictions, but I really really really REALLY want to!This completely reminds me about the time I had my surgery in regards to my ganglion cyst on my dominant hand a few months ago. Though I'm off of it right now thankfully, I do remember how agonizing it was to sit in my chair with ideas streaming through my head as if there was no end; especially when I'm unable to even properly type without being in tremendous pain.
Okay, I'm sure not everyone is going to have to be sent to the operation room, get surgery and be stuck with this issue. Whether it's being away from the computer for a certain time limit or banned from touching any sort of laptops and computers till your little 'grounded' punishment is over, that sort of frustrating feeling is common to us writers. And it's one of those feelings we constantly will feel.
One way I deal with the time I'm mentally grumbling about having my cast removal delayed due to a certain doctor's vacation is to take this chance to overlook my entire fiction. I'll be able to one by one examine each one and criticize on what needs to be improved. Maybe I need a much broader range of vocabularies? Maybe I should try to build up more on Yuki's mixed feelings of loving between Rena and Mayu. There's always improvements that needs to be made. Fictions are never perfect and it's a little silly in my personal opinion and viewpoint for one to think that there's nothing needed to be worked upon. Sure, you don't have to work on the grammatical structures of your sentences but you could take a look at maybe changing a word or two you had planted in the OS? Fiction is another form of art and mostly we all know that art can always be improved upon. So keep note of it and when you return your fingers back on the keyboard, you'll be able to make improvements on your next update.
Another way I deal with this agonizing boredom is simply using this time to read more. Read more novels and articles whether hard copy or on the internet; it'll vastly improve the number of techniques to use for your stories. You could end up trying to use that new second-person perspective technique you've been reading from that one book for your next OS. And finally, sort out your fictions! Picture how the next chapter will be organized and if you're going to end it with a cliffhanger. Or maybe you'll be looking into how you might want to deepen the relationship between the two midgets in the 48 Group.
It's all up to you on what you'll be doing in this time.
5. No one likes my fiction!Not everyone is going to like your fiction(s). And for sure, not everyone is going to agree to a single pairing in your story. (I'm sure Saeyuki/JuriMayu lovers aren't too fond of seeing Mayuki and vice versa.) But overall, there's going to be at least one person that will LOVE what you are doing.
My main concern though is the reason why you're writing fictions. Are you writing because you have a passion for writing and love to share the idea to the entire net community? Or do you write for the pleasure of seeing countless members hit the 'Favorite,' 'Like' or 'Thanks' button and comment on your fictions? I'm going to be blunt and this is entirely based on my sole opinion and viewpoint alone (sorry if it's a little harsh) but whenever I see certain individuals state on some writing websites that they'll only continue their fiction with the next chapter if everyone comments and raises the number of views to a certain amount, I can't help but shake my head and mumble with distaste, automatically turned off with reading their work. The goal of writing is the express your joy and fantasy of placing favorite characters in specific situation that won't be possible in reality, not rewarding your readers with an update just because they managed to give you 25 'Thank You's. Although it is great to see individuals give up their time to comment and like your work, try not to be solely relying it as a motivation of your fictions.
Well, that's at least how I think about the purpose of writing. Comments and likes are just bonus brownie points for working hard on your fictions. Just remember that some readers, especially on the net, are shy and like to stalk/stay silent for whatever reason. There might be a secret fan just in the distant that isn't able to comment!
Now here are the steps/rules I proceed with when I write my fictions. All are fully based on my sole opinion.
1. Ideas!What's a fiction without ideas? That's basically a blank word document before you!
Ideas are the root of my fictions. And thanks to my wide range of imagination that can go into a state of haywire in seconds, it's not hard to start bursting up one that could possibly become a series. Start jotting down your ideas and who is the likely candidate for being the main star of the story. Or if you're more like a mental person that likes to keep everything in your head, you might like putting the pieces together of the plot one-by-one in your head. Now there are inspirations that can give us even more ideas than expected. Seeing a music video of a human that actually, in reality, is a dog in reality might spark one's imagination of rewriting that scenario with a pairing or two. Music can indeed play a huge role here. Then there could be, out of the blue, a great plot just slapping you upside the head while you're taking notes in your history class.
The main point is to keep on creating ideas!
2. Motivation and DedicationSo we have a dozen luggage or two filled with ideas that are on the brim of exploding if we don't do something about it. Now it's time to sort through them and choose one (or a small number of) ideas that you'll want to work with. At least that's how I operate. I rummage through each one and think about two things: Motivation and dedication. Am I motivated enough to write countless chapters or spend hours to days just thinking about a single fiction? And do I have the dedication to stick with the fiction till the very end? This will easily let me lose those ideas that are just barely suited for drabbles.
3. PacingI've already explained pacing in a discussion, but I'll try to shorten it here.
Beginning, middle and end. That's what makes up a fiction or a story in general.
There's that juicy section in the middle that we're allowed to fill up to our heart's content without ever having to worry. However, there's that little worry that makes us wonder if we're rushing or dragging certain parts too often. To me, I pace myself by thinking about the readers. Will they throw out multiple questions that should be answered if I add enough details? Is it too slow to the point that even I, the writer myself, am falling asleep while typing down the section? Those are the questions I keep in mind while I put down chapter after chapter. It's very helpful when you imagine yourself being the reader; revising and reading through a chapter as if you have absolutely no idea what's going on. Although the element of surprise is diminished and tension won't play so well since you already know what you're doing, think more about the context of the details. I'm sure the last thing I would want to read is Rena step-by-step clean up in her bathroom for five extremely long paragraph when it's in regards to Rena trying to give Jurina a call during the clean up! (Exaggeration intended) Not to mention that it's best to add details in appropriate timings and spots in the story. Again, I most likely won't want to be reading long dialogues of how much they love each other between Sae and Yuki when they're actually under attack with a titan at their hometown! (Shingeki no Kyojin/Attack on Titan reference)
It's all about how well the details are placed and used. That usually is the main point that drives the pacing of the plot.
4. CharacterizationCharacterization... We all like to have our characters be as colorful, right? Black and white is something we try to avoid (unless we intentionally and purposely want someone painted like that.)
It's somewhat hard to explain since I could end up ranting FOREVER on this topic. But I will at least state the main points that should be noted in regards to making characters stand out with their personality and make an impact on the readers.
Connection: There has to be some sort of connection. Whether it's about the tragic past of divorced parents and angst-y self-harm all the way to falling in love with a certain someone and having many great times with friends in a baseball game, readers should be able to connect to at least one part of a character. And the connection doesn't have to stop with just their personality or past; it could be all about their emotions! Empathy is the goal here for the readers to our written characters. As cruel as it sounds, we like to wave cookies in front of our readers and guide them to the direction that we wish for them to take through the plot, letting them feel for the characters and believe in what we want them to believe in.
Emotions: I think writing about rocks trying to tell us how much they hate it when humans cut down nature over time is going to be quite difficult on a realistic standpoint. Same thing with characters. Writing one that is emotionless (unless they were like that for a good reason) is... hard. Try to put yourself in the characters' shoes and imagine the reaction that you would be doing if they got rejected by someone they truly loved for five years. I sure as hell know that I'm not going to be a happy camper and run around with sparkles, exclaiming how much love I'm feeling when being rejected! (Unless I aim for the character to have a personality of a lunatic)
Mary Sue: Enough said, it's my best advice to try to not write characters like they're Mary Sues. And why you might ask? Because a perfect character is... lacking. You know you hate them yet you can't. They don't have enough personality to be considered realistic because they can run around and perform amazing feats that even the most God-like creature can't act. Their smile and personality charms almost every men and women that lay one of the five senses upon them. They're like Gods/Goddesses! No wonder why we can't hate them at all! It's just impossible! And that is something that I don't really want to happen to my characters. Characters have flaws, not perfection. Even if they are perfect, maybe that is there flaw? It's complicated, but mainly it's best to avoid one writing Mary Sues even in a fantasy base setting.
Common Sense: This could weigh heavily in a realistic setting than a fantasy. Now let's take in an example: When there's danger of a man-eating werewolf, these options are most likely going through our head:
A. RUN LIKE HELLZ
B. Fight off that creature in order to save everyone! Like a hero!
C. Stand frozen in shock, knowing that... well... You're not going to make it out alive.
D. Perform some sort of Sailor's Moon magical girl transformation and save the day!
I'm sure the last option is silly since any common man both male and female are 99.99 with a infinite number of 9's running behind this % of the time is not going to happen. And looking at the choices, the first one seems like a reasonable action to take upon. Most run for their life. There's the other two below it that are also realistic and one of the many possible results that could be produced in a situation like this. Some who are brave will run off and protect those that they love while some might just stand in their spot, knowing that they're going to be flying up to heaven (or down to hell) in no time. Common sense needs to be thought of in order to make a figure realistic. They don't always need to be the chosen one!
5. ConclusionSweet! You've reached to a point where you can wrap everything up, smack them up with pride and step back with a satisfying smile.
Well... That is if you write a conclusion that ends the way you want it to end.
It's hard to conclude or even think about it when a long-running story of yours is finally coming to an end. And it's time to put the sprinkles on top of your cupcake or whatever sweets before popping it into your mouth. Since I only have finished two fictions (with two completely different outcomes that I wanted) in this fandom: "Disappearance (Mayuki)" and "Spending the Moment with You (Atsumina). It's a little unfair considering the difference of my skills after midpoint with "Disappearance," in comparison to the other fiction, I'll still be judging it as though they're released at the same time.
"Disappearance" has an ending where I want to shock the readers. I want to startle the readers and try to make it seem as though I have settle the entire plot down to its final moment. But I like surprises and I want to make a somewhat satisfying ending that is a bit on the cheerful side (since some of my readers cried over the entire plot, LOL. Gomenasai!) But for the other fiction, "Spending the Moment with You," I can clearly admit that it was rushed. The entire plot from the first four chapters got instantly mushed into a puddle of weird mess at the finale. I personally am not proud of it at all and did not expect how bad it was.
Finally, remember that it's best not to leave messy wrap ups in the end. Disappointing readers is usually the last thing on an author's mind.
6. Season 2? "Oh yes! We all want that continuation of Yuko's final confession to Haruna! They finally reciprocated their feelings to each other and are now considered a couple! Will they marry each other? Will they adopt a baby then? I want to know more! SEASON 2! SEASON 2! SEASON 2-"Okay, let me just stop there. A burning question and request that many writers will always be faced with at least by one person is a season 2/continuation of a plot that have already completed. Whether it's a OS or a series, it will happen.
But how will we know if that's... the right choice to make? Is it appropriate to even continue the plot?
It honestly depends upon the author. Will you be able to recreate an entire new plot based on the past one? Or will it be somewhat of a spin-off that revisits the flashbacks of all our favorite characters? Sequels take all sort of shapes, sizes and forms. And remember that this is another fiction that will have to run through the entire process of starting a story from scratch! It's no easy feat and requires even more brain powers compared to the first (expectations from readers might be high this time). Most likely we all like to see more and even better plot line after the first season!
Then there are some fictions that will be best remained alone and leave it as it is. Some fictions that continue will only grow worse rather than get better. Ideas can run short easily and the main plot will lose their point from the previous (unless it's a spin-off, etc.) season. But like I said, it all depends on the author themselves. You get to decide if you want to continue it or not.
That's a lot to cover, but if there's any questions or concerns, I'll be happy to answer!
EDIT (11/11/13)
[Genre]
I'll do my very best in this section to explain about how to write the genre in my perspective with a few tips. Of course, it will take time until I am able to fully cover everything. I will add more in the near future when I am fully sure I am able to write them without much trouble. So please look forward to more updates in this section!
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1. AngstOh
LOVELY. Angst... One of my favorite genre to write in, easiest to and of course, what many readers/writers would know me as... "Angsty LoyalFlutist" as quoted by Tii. It's almost obvious that I'm going to start talking about this.
Now there are a few tips that I can give out. So we shall go with the first tip that pops to mind.
Tip #1: Definition of AngstIn order to at least understand how angst works, you might as well learn the definition of it. And of course, with trusty Google search browser at hand, we get this:
Search Results
angst
/aNG(k)st,äNG(k)st/
noun
noun: angst
1.
a feeling of deep anxiety or dread, typically an unfocused one about the human condition or the state of the world in general.
"adolescent angst"
synonyms: anxiety, fear, apprehension, worry, foreboding, trepidation, malaise, disquiet, disquietude, unease, uneasinessAlright, so we now have the definition/meaning at hand. Technically "angst" always revolves around sadness, worries, heartbreaks, deaths, and all of that fun words and events that would make just about anyone want to cry and smack their head against the wall. Literally. Okay, maybe not literally to many of us, but you can get what I'm trying to say there. Angst = Sadness and torturing the readers/writers with many heartbreaks. Simple as that. Just remember that this isn't a place where you get to see happy-go-lucky pink ponies leaping around with rainbows spurting out from its behinds. No no, this is the land of tears and fear of striking a sensitive core of your heart strings.
Tip #2: Experience yourself in a world of Angst!...Yeah that doesn't sound quite right. But think about it. Let's say you're going to read manga for the first time ever.
Those manga that are translated in your language, yes, but it's your first time ever having one at hand. You've always heard many reading it and those that have enjoyed it... Now it is in the palm of your hand. Yet... When you crack open up the book with one turn of the cover by the right side... You're faced with an anime character holding up a sign, warning that you're reading the wrong way. Sighing greatly, you decided to flip it over and noticed that you have to start reading it the other way. Then upon flipping it correctly for once, when seeing the first couple panels... You're already lost. You've been used to reading left to right. Now you're forced to read right to left. Just how confusing could it get!? Where do you read?! Up first or down first? Right to the bubble first or that text box right below it?!
Ah, please tell me at least one of you had this sort of experience before. At least if you were from a country or area where reading mainly consist of going left to right. (I personally had that trouble when I borrowed Prince of Tennis manga in my middle school.) But anyway, you can see that the first time you enter into the realm of reading manga, you're utterly lost. But that's okay! I'm sure there are more titles and books to read in this manga world. Soon after a couple titles... You'll get the hang of it. You'll adjust into it and feel a bit more comfy in this topic.
The same will go with angst. If you don't normally read nor write angst, you're not going to get the feel of it. And not getting a feel of it will pose a difficulty and even possibly a barrier against writing in this genre. It's just going to be really hard to trend through the unknown unless you know what exactly you're waddling through on that one path. Start off by even watching some film. How about reading a sad poem that will stir something from deep within your emotional world? Or even listening to a heartbreaking story on the radio?
Whatever you do, it's best to start getting into touch with the angsty world that you will soon step forth and write in.
Tip #3: Write! Write! Write!Nothing more needs to be said. It's best to be writing in this genre as much as possible.
Writing is like practice. As I myself am practicing to writing fluff with other fellow writers (and sadly failing on a huge aspect since I like to input angst for some unknown reason), I gain more and more insight on the techniques and scenarios occurring in the genre. Just as if you were to play the sport of baseball, you would want to practice swinging your bat and hit as many balls as you can before the actual game. You'll gain skills and increase the ability of being able to hit a homerun over time.
Now instead of making homeruns and being in a baseball stadium, you'll be staring in front of your laptop/computer/tablet/phone/whatever technological device, typing away and burning a hole of your frontal lobe due to the bright screen. Maybe earn yourself a ticket to the eye doctor and get yourself a prescribed glass.
Oh. That sounds quite pleasant, doesn't it? It may feel like work and heck, even I personally feel like this is work at times. To force myself to stare at the screen and type away as I churn out more and more words. Soon though you'll come into terms and start enjoying what this genre and the writing style it presents. I can tell you for a fact that the writing style is much different from others. (Just like action means quick basic details and short sentence structures.) For this genre, long sentences with many details pertaining to the emotional state of the characters are very important to keep note.
Tip #4: Get in touch with your HeartNow how I write my angst is not just from personal experiences but putting myself in the shoes of my characters. And yes, it's that cliche saying again that is always given as an advice to every writer. "Put yourself into the shoes of your writers." Of course. Who doesn't think of that, Sherlock? As common as the saying goes, it's crucial especially in angst.
Angst heavily deals with emotions. We're not talking about action pace where you want to see how blood is shed and scroll down the page with a sense of hyperness and need to see how Sae would comeback against the king of all boxers in the ring. Not at all in this part. Angst is definitely a slow-paced genre. We are dealing with the human's emotions. And of course, emotions are a very interesting and unique part to our life. Each and every one of us portray and feel them differently. No one can feel the same as another (unless you were clones that are programmed to have same feelings in any stimuli, then I really wonder who you are... a cyborg?).
So let's start off with something simple: Your parents died in a car accident.
Simple yet a very sensitive topic to many. Ask yourself this: How would you react to this? How would your character react to this?
Pretend you are the character themselves. Pretend you are Yuko and blending in your own being with her. Pretend you a viewing a horrified vision of a car crash with your parents inside of that vehicle colliding just a second ago. Before your eyes, you could only be dumbfounded at the scenario of ambulances rushing in and out of the scene, dragging dead corpses that is so-called your parents into their emergency vehicle. And you know for a fact that they're merely sent to the hospital for a fact that they would be determined and recorded as the car crash being the cause of their death.
Let's look at the question I've asked earlier again: "How would you react to this?"
Some would react very violently to this case and blame the God up above (if they aren't atheist). Some would become numb; unable to form any other sort of emotion and struck with denial and hallucination along the path. Some would just cry on the spot and feel hopeless. It all varies. And that, my dear fellow writer, is your first step into the world of angst. You must feel in touch with your own emotion and tell yourself that even if you were never in this sort of situation before, how would you react to it?
Let's take a look at the second question I threw from up above: "How would your character react to this?"
Please... Please please please! I highly advise that you please remember that you are writing your character, not yourself.
If you decided to make Yuko a very rowdy person who likes to pick fight (like the Yuko we all know in the Majisuka Gakuen drama series), then we wouldn't want this girl to suddenly become numb and pretend that this entire ordeal didn't exist. Unless that is what you're aiming for for the sake of the plot, it wouldn't really... fit her character well. Rather it would be best if you imagine yourself being angry in that situation. Although some of us know for a fact it's hard to imagine being angry and violent in such situation, then congratulation. You've earned yourself one step outside of the box and away from the safety net in order to experience and write something new for your benefit.
Tip #5: Angst sometimes doesn't always have to be AngstOh... Wait wait wait. What the heaven are you talking about, girl!? How the... What the... Why are we talking and reading about angst when in the end... "Angst sometimes doesn't have to be Angst"?! You have got to be kiddin' me! Okay, before I am going to be attacked by a swarm of pies, leeks, pencils and frying pans, I must state that this is almost always true in my personal opinion.
Let's think about it. Fluffy genre fictions don't technically always have fluff, correct? There's at least a conflict in there, thus creating tension and progress the fiction forward. And that means there is a slight "angst" in the fiction. The same would go for the angst genre here. It doesn't always have to be angst from beginning to end in order to make the piece of work be labeled under this category. Maybe there are some fluff occurring in the middle! Or maybe at the very end? Beginning even maybe? Or all three of them?
Hm... Let's make an example right on the spot:
1. Characters are introduced
2. Problems are introduced
3. Atsuko realized that Yuko was lying the entire time and was cheating on her
4. Atsuko had gotten drunk while Yuko was feeling guilty
5. Atsuko blindly went on a drunk date with Takamina
6. Realized that Yuko had thought Atsuko broken up with her due to going out on a drunk date with Takamina by accident
7. Atsuko and Yuko has a small conflict, but made up
8. Atsyuu came back together
9. Takamina comes in and ends up making Atsuko love her without being drunk
10. Yuko feels hurt
11. Yuko gets into a big fight with Takamina
12. In the end, Atsuko interferes and expresses that she truly loves Yuko in the end and no one else
13. Atsuyuu made up once again and officially became a couple
14. THE ENDSo we got a simple (okay, maybe not so simple) outline here of a story. As you can tell, there are a couple conflicts and even fluff moment inserted into the piece. Now... Let's just imagine that this is angst all the way and remove all of the fluff with possibly a very different ending.
1. Characters are introduced
2. Problems are introduced
3. Atsuko realized that Yuko was lying the entire time and was cheating on her
4. Atsuko had gotten drunk while Yuko was feeling guilty
5. Atsuko blindly went on a drunk date with Takamina
6. Realized that Yuko had thought Atsuko broken up with her due to going out on a drunk date with Takamina by accident
7. Atsuko and Yuko has a conflict
8. Yuko feels hurt
9. Yuko gets into a big fight with Takamina
10. All three of them ended up being placed in separate path, never to see each other ever again...Yikes. Talk about... a very angsty piece. Now I'm obviously not saying it's forbidden to write such plot, it's just... angst throughout the entire piece. A little variety wouldn't hurt to spice it up.
Tip #6: Please remember that this is a fiction, not real life"...And thus... You... shouldn't have... died for me..."
Kumi whispered with anguish as she stared at the injured Kanon from up above her figure. The younger girl has widen her eyes upon hearing for a fact that... Kumi was destined to die all along. The snipers and assassins hired by the government wanted to kill Kumi ever since she was born. It was a surprise that she was still alive to this day into adulthood. Yet she holds the greatest secret that Kanon never knew till she was on the verge of death.
Yagami Kumi was never human to begin with. She was a special being that, if she lingered any longer, hold the ability to destroy the Earth by the time she passed the age of 21. Now at the age of 20, many civilians and fighter squads were frantically on the search to eradicate her life for their own safety. Until Kanon came stumbling into the picture, she would never imagine Kumi being this dangerous. The high school student that first met Kumi a year ago... She had protected Kumi as Kumi has protected her... But never would she realize that all the time of Kumi rejecting her love to Kanon... To always scold the younger girl of protecting Kumi... was because of this reason.
Shakily she formed a small smile as she felt her body collapse on top of Kumi. The bullet wounds that she had sustained were a danger to her life. And sadly, despite blocking the bullets, they went right through her body and into Kumi's. Two figures becoming colder as each second passed by, Kanon then uttered in a weak, raspy voice with what remaining strength she has left.
"I... I wanted to... protect you... because... I love you..."
Kanon at this point didn't care what sort of being Kumi was. All she cared about was loving Kumi. Loving the girl before her that cared for her the same. The one that always would sacrifice herself for Kanon's safety. The girl that would crack up random jokes that only Kanon would get and laugh about. Yagami Kumi was the person that she truly loved no matter if she reciprocated the feeling or not. And sad enough, she wasn't able to stay conscious long enough in order to hear Kumi's answer. Her vision failing and sense of hearing muffled out; an annoying ringing sound resonating into her eardrums. Soon darkness enveloped her....Did I make you sad just yet? No? Oh well, whatever it is, you must all understand and at least take into consideration that this is
ONLY A FICTION. Remember that fictions are based on a fantasy and imagination of our brain. Unless we all based it on a true life situation where a member is heartbroken at her friend's scandal, then remember that this doesn't occur in real life. It's understandable to feel terrible, but don't take it to an extreme level where you think the member has died a tragic death in reality. If you haven't noticed, both Yagami Kumi and Kimoto Kanon are still well and alive today, LOL.
Remember! Writing fiction is for the joy of expressing joy and the pleasure of having such imagination to the public world.
Not to predict and spread the fact that the world is going to end at 2012 (which obviously didn't happen).
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