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Offline olive29

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #20 on: August 17, 2013, 03:48:01 AM »
Good girl, Yuko...  :thumbsup

Yuko is in love with Acchan but willing to give up on her..  :cry:

Can't wait for the next chapter...

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #21 on: August 17, 2013, 03:55:50 AM »
Yuko is a very good friend, very understanding
How long has minami lock up in that house? I mean she doesn't remember ice cream
Dad n nagano are totaly "sick" people

I got the feeling happy moment is going to be short
"She did not realize what I was trying to say, I saw the Nagano turn in our direction"
Did nagano really manage see minami?

Thank u, please update soon ~~ please.....please....

Offline Takaminafan49

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #22 on: August 17, 2013, 05:37:35 AM »
Awww...Takamina~ You have Yuko and Atsuko as your friends now!

Good job Yuko!:3

I only started to read this fanfic... And I like it! <3

^_^ can't wait for the next chapter!

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #23 on: August 17, 2013, 05:50:50 AM »
Oh...Kuu too?? Well nevermind actually...
-Anyway, she's unconscious for one week already~ Poor her...
-Yuko love Atsuko but...Aww...AtsuYuu is good but my AtsuMina!!~
-Lol, Geez...I would really kill her dad and Nagano...
-She doesn't even know ice-cream!! Poor thing....
-Nagano is still searching for Minami?! I won't let ya....

>Pftt...And how can i?? Anyway, plz update soon!!~ Minami's life is in your hand...Lol~~

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #24 on: August 17, 2013, 10:18:52 AM »
Poor Yuko... She could not be with Atsuko...

What would Minami do about Atsuko's feeling for her?

Can't wait to see what's going to happen next

Thank you for the update

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #25 on: August 18, 2013, 03:06:06 AM »
ah~
thank you for update :3
wow, takamina doesn't know hat ice cream taste like  :shocked

ah btw, pls make haruna to be yuko's pair  :D
im waiting for your update  ;)

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #26 on: August 18, 2013, 04:38:11 AM »
i just cant wait to read na next chapter :shocked
Pls update soon :on gay:

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #27 on: August 18, 2013, 04:56:18 AM »
OMG my poor Minami, i smell a lot of drama here...

thanks

update soon!!!

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #28 on: September 08, 2013, 11:59:06 AM »
Takatsuko-chan (sorry, may i call u dat...?)!!~ I'm start missing your fic here!!~
-Just checked ur profile and it says you're still alive!!~ I mean alive in my thoughts...
-Last active is yesterday (7 September)...I'm stalking u for the best!!~ Lol...
-So hey, don't worry...You can update it anytime and sorry for bringing it up...
-I mean...I totally missed ur fic...!!~ But no worry, honestly~ I'll wait for it...
-I miss it!!~ You the author, Takatsuko-chan, Acchan, Yuko, Takamina!!~ *look at Nagano & Taka's father*
-As if i'll miss you guys..Back to the topic, whatever it is...I miss ur update!!~ T ________ T

>Hyan~ Always waiting for your presence n' fic Takatsuko-chan!!~ Sry for being annoying~ Hyahan~


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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #30 on: September 08, 2013, 06:11:01 PM »
atsuko-chan
pls update this fic  :cry:
im gonna cry if you dont  :cry:

Offline FoxKing

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #31 on: September 09, 2013, 12:45:02 PM »
Poor minami.... :cry:

Nice fic, hope you update soon...  :twothumbs

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 2(17/08/13)
« Reply #32 on: September 09, 2013, 03:25:19 PM »
Minami kawaii~~~I dun like dad and Nagano how can they do that to her I will kill them :twisted:

Offline Takahashi Atsuko

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 3(22/09/13)
« Reply #33 on: September 22, 2013, 05:15:19 PM »
Heeey guys :D
Look who's not dead after all xD
First, I want to apologize for taking so long to post the 3 chap, i lost my inspiration to write  :err:
But after reading your comments (especially Kochiki comment, and you can call me atsuko or takaatsu if you want ^^) my inspiration back and could to finish the third chapter.
I promise u, i will finish this fic  :on GJ:
Well, i hope u like this chapter ( i love it xD) And comment pweeese ^^

( I'm really, reeeally sorry for my bad eng >.<)




Chapter 3
I entered the house running, I tripped over my own feet and I fell on the floor. Again fear invaded my soul and spread rapidly throughout the body.
“Takamina " said Maeda. Then I noticed that she was shaking me, trying to call me to reason.
I looked at her; her eyes were full of concern.
“Takamina was that the man who hit you?” She asked.
I shook my head up and down and raised my fist with two fingers stretched.
“Two? Was two persons? “Oshima asked.
I shook my head up and down. I understand that they are concerned and want to find out what happened, but I 'm afraid to tell them what happened. And if my dad finds out that they know everything? He’s able to kill them, but they must know the truth, so they can help me.
“You know them?” Maeda asked.
I was about to answer but I heard a voice shouting:
‘DON’T TELL THEM ' I heard my father's voice screaming in my head.
For a moment I forgot to breathe, my body started shaking and I felt my heart stop beating.
'KEEP YOUR MOUTH SHUT YOU FUCKING WHORE! ‘My father screamed.
I'm afraid...
I fell to my knees and covered my ears with my hands. Inside I was screaming for help, but my voice wasn’t quit in any way. I felt pain all over my body, it looked like my head was going to burst at any moment, and I looked at my hands and saw only blood, blood, blood throughout the body. I tried to scream but my voice would not come out.
‘THAT’S IT, SUFFER! SUFFER YOU LITTLE MISERABLE! '
Please stop! I beg you! I just want to be normal, please let me live my life! What have I done to you? Well… I guess it does not matter...
“Takamina “I heard someone calling my name.
I want someone to tell me that I'm not alone ... Someone who hug me and say that all this is just a nightmare...
“Takamina “I heard the same voice calling my name.

But I think it’s impossible ... There is nobody...
                                     I ... I’m...

                                                                                                     Alone....
Until I heard something that I had never heard before, something pounding, I cannot explain...
Tum tum, tum tum, tum tum... A slightly accelerated pace. Furthermore, there was something else, I felt anything involving me. It made me feel warm inside. It was so warm, so good ... so good...
 "I 'm here with you!” Said the same voice, "I’ll never leave you alone”
You will not leave me alone? Good...

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‘MINAMI WAKE UP NOW! ‘My father shouted.
I jumped out of bed scared and ran away to his office.
‘Who were those girls who were you yesterday? ‘He asked.
‘Are some girls I met my lord’
' Ahahahahahahaha but you do not know anyone! Do you know why? You are destined to serve me until the end of your days! AAHAHAHAHAH '
‘Takamina! ‘I heard the voice of Maeda.
I looked back, she and Oshima were there, completely naked, Nagano was torturing them in front of me.
‘You like the view Minami? It's what I do to all your friends! '
Not...
‘Stay there, seeing them suffer! You cannot do anything! '
No!
‘MUAHAHAHAHAH’
“NOOOOO!!!!!!”

“Takamina wake up!” Hear the voice of Maeda.
I opened my eyes, my face was completely wet with tears. When I realized that it was just a dream, I hugged Maeda.
“Takamina?”
Tears kept falling, that nightmare was really scary, Maeda ... No!
She hugged me too, somehow I felt myself safe with her.
"I 'm here with you, it was just a nightmare” She stroked my hair "Let’s go back to sleep, you need to rest”
She lest my embrace but I grabbed her hand not letting her go away.
She looked at me, seemed not understand my reaction, so I shook my head from side to side.
She smiled.
“You want me to stay her with you tonight?" She asked me.
I shook my head up and down.
“Okay, if it makes you feel better " She laid beside me.
I approached more and stared her for a few seconds until she moved closer to me, her lips went slowly toward mine. Why is my heart beating so fast? Why do I feel dizzy? Why does my face hot?
At the last second she stopped and kissed my forehead.
 ”Good night," she said smiling.
She laid her head on the pillow and closed her eyes.
As much as I try to fall asleep, could not. I kept thinking about her.
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The next morning I woke up with something warm on my face , I opened my eyes and I came across a creature on top of me , I had seen many of these creatures in the street through my window but never got close to none.
“Good morning, " said Maeda entering the room.
I threw a questioning look to the small creature.
“Ah, this is a gift I bought for you “she said “You know what this is?”
A gift? For me? I shook my head from side to side and she was amazed to see that I did not.
“This is a cat, is very cute isn’t it?” She asked.
I shook my head up and down.
“We have to give it a name, Huuum, what about Kiko? Sounds good? "
I shook my head up and down and she smiled.
I looked at the cat and stroked his fur soft and fluffy. Then I remembered something important, I had to thank her.
I looked at her face, she was looking at the picture beside her television, and I remembered a way to thank her.
I approached her to give her a kiss on the cheek as thanks, but did not go exactly as I expected. The moment my lips would touch her face, she turned around and ended up kissing her lips. I widened my eyes, did not know what to do, but somehow it felt good. She was also unresponsive.
I separated our lips and watched her reaction, but I wanted more, something inside me woke up and was asking for more, more ... more...
Her face showed that she was surprised but somehow she seemed out of her, she approached me and kissed my lips again.
Her lips were sweet ... Soft ... Warm... For a moment I forgot everything while our lips devoured each other as if we needed that kiss to survive.
Automatically I put my arms around her neck causing our bodies to stay out of space separating them. She lay down and pulled me on top of her without ever separating our lips.
And we only stopped to catch breath. I lay my head on her chest and she put her arms around my waist.
“I’m sorry, I do not know what happened" she said "I lost control of my body and it just happened"
It’s not your fault, I also lost control. I want to tell her this but my voice does not come out.
“Miaw”
“Kiko, you must be hungry, huh?”
I got up and sat on the bed beside her.
My heart was still racing and my face was hot…







So, did you like it?  :nya:
I will try to post Chapter 4 fast, my classes started and i have to study :pleeease:
But wait for me okay?

See you later  :byebye: :byebye: :byebye:

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 3(22/09/13)
« Reply #34 on: September 22, 2013, 05:35:47 PM »
I know it's not quite right to say this, but I want to KILL Takamina's father!!
The kiss... OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!
I can die happily now... Thank you for this update.
I hope you can post chapter 4 soon, but I what I want you to do more is study.
Don't rush it and take your time. :)

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 3(22/09/13)
« Reply #35 on: September 22, 2013, 05:36:44 PM »
yeaaay update  :cathappy:

i like it ?  :? hmmm  :huhuh

IM REALLY REALLY LOVE IT  :inlove:

I WANT MOAR TAKATSU - SAN XD

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 3(22/09/13)
« Reply #36 on: September 22, 2013, 05:46:42 PM »
thanks for update ...
wow atsumina first kiss?oh so sweet ~~
waiting for next chapter  :twothumbs

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 3(22/09/13)
« Reply #37 on: September 22, 2013, 06:40:48 PM »
hahaha that was epic!!! :D

I really love it when Minami tries to kiss Atsuko's cheek but at the last moment Atsuko turns over and their lips met instead  :heart:

Can you just kill off her father and that other dude? I'm sitting here screaming at my laptop like a crazy person and thats not good for my image at all :P

Hope you could update soon  XD

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Offline Takahashi Atsuko

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 3(22/09/13)
« Reply #38 on: September 22, 2013, 07:15:45 PM »
TakaminaBG: Thank you for your comprehension :)

Blackwhite: I'm glad you like it :D


Lezperv: I love it too  :heart: it's soooo puuurfect  :shy2: Yeah i can kill them XDDDD I'm going to try update soon :)
                 Ps: I GIVE YOU MORE ATSUMINA XD

Offline Kochiki

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Re: Show me love: Chapter 3(22/09/13)
« Reply #39 on: September 23, 2013, 02:31:14 PM »
Argh...After a 4-5 day hiatus, you updated it!!~ I'm happy!!~
-Sorry for the late comment Takatsuko-san...Again....
-I'm so happy that i can fire you up to update it!!~
-Oh...It was just a nightmare, man...For a sec there, i thought...
-It was real!!~ You just saved my life~ Lol...Yes, you are~
-Lips, oh...Why can't you make it more~ Takamina and i want more...

>Ahaha!!~ JK...Plz update soon, don't worry, i'll wait for the next chapter~

PS: Glad to know you're alive... xD

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