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You Are My Sunshine - chapter 30 (4/11/2014)
« on: January 20, 2013, 01:36:51 PM »

As I was walking through the park...
Enjoying the peace feelings...
Something caught my attention..
There, a girl playing at the playground happily...
Like a kid who never played..or even saw a playground..
A voice was heard, calling someone's name.
The girl earlier who currently playing at a swing  stop playing as the other girl who called her coming to her.
Maybe her sister..or friend..I thought.
'There you are,come on takamina, lets go home its late already..'
'But...I still want to play, Miichan~' takamina frowned adding a sad expression to her face.
'Aw~ Don't be sad..tomorrow you can come here again to play okay?'Said the girl named Miichan.
'Yay!!' takamina cheered happily like a kid...
'Let's go!!'Miichan took Takamina's hand and they walk away from the playground.
As I watched them walked away.. My mouth unconcsiously muttered the name...


Hey everyone!! Anyone?? O.o huhu.. Well, this is my first time writing a fanfic so...I dont know why I want to make one..if there is anything wrong with my writing/fanfic please tell me.. I will stop doing this if u want to.. Hehe.. Please be good to me!!  n_n
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Re: new fanfic [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #1 on: January 20, 2013, 02:37:42 PM »
nice intro, I'm curious to see where its headed :) Good luck with the fic, and looking forward to the next chapter :)

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Re: new fanfic [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #2 on: January 20, 2013, 02:40:00 PM »
hohohoho LOLOLOL so many posts out there XDDD

umm... an Atsumina huh-----
I think I still have to see the next story :)
頑張って! ojii-chan will read it~ LOL

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Re: new fanfic [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #3 on: January 20, 2013, 03:55:04 PM »
nee, it's good intro, you should continue it. I wonder that it will be atsumina or other pairing.

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new fanfic [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #4 on: January 21, 2013, 10:40:21 AM »
List Of character:

Takahashi Minami
21 years old, but currently due to some accident happen to her in the past, she acts like a kid,innocent she’s back  to her childhood times..

Minegishi Minami
Known as Miichan,Takamina’s best friend. She owns a bakery. She have to take care of Takamina and they lives in one house together with the Mayuyu,Jurina,kanon,and lovetan.

Maeda Atsuko
A member of a powerful mafia in Japan. Even though she is involved in mafia, but she is kind...only to people who being kind to her. She like doing  things on her own. She joins mafia because of some reason that will be reveal soon..

more character will be revealed soon~

actually I still have no idea about the title for this fic~~ huhuhu :P
wahhh.. everyone!! thank for the support!  :w00t:
I think my English is getting worst~ -.-  :sweatdrop:
please continue support me!  :nervous
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new fanfic: Chapter 1 [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #5 on: January 21, 2013, 02:03:34 PM »
Chapter 1

Atsuko’s  POV

After  having  a  small walk  at  the  playground, I  went back to the mansion where I lived.
My mind was still thinking about the girl at the playground earlier. She looked familiar.
But why did she acted like a kid?
Despite her small figure, I’m pretty sure that she is not a kid.
I think I have met her somewhere before though.

but where???



As soon I entered the mansion, my mind doesn't think about the girl anymore as something else happened.
“What happened?” I asked to one of my underling as I looked around at  the mess in the living room.
“W-well... Rena-sama,..err...Gekikara,..melon pan... ehh...etou...”*sighed* I let out a sighed knowing what was probably happened earlier.
“Nevermind, just clean the mess.. and...where is she?” I asked.
“She’s in Mariko-sama’s bedroom right now..with Mariko-sama..eating  melon pan” answered her while cleaning the living room.

Feeling a bit tired, I walked straight to my room.
As I was about to enter my room, the door across my room opened revealing a girl with a black jacket..
Across my room is Yuki’s room.  Yes... its her..also known as Black.
Even her  past  was also black, as I can’t see anything from it..
Walking passed me, Yuki glared at me like usual..and then she disappeared  just like that..
Like a wind passing by me..
This girl is really something... well, everyone in this big house is really something.. they have their own stories...I hope the author will revealed them one by one soon...

My thought was disturbed by the ringtone of my phone..
I pressed the green button on my phone..
“Maeda-sama, we have a problem, looks like there is other gang of mafia disturbing our places.” Said the person on the phone.
“Just let them be.. “ I told her.
“but...Maeda-sama... they-“
“I said just let them.. I will take care of this myself. And don’t you ever dare tell Mariko about this. “
“O-okay..then..” said the person on the other side.
“ Wait, *smirked* why don’t you buy some melon pan for Rena before you going back home..I don’t want her to cause another chaos in the living room.” Well, I hate hearing her laughs when she turned into Gekikara actually.
“*sighed*.. fine...I will buy it, but i’m not going to give it to her m-myself!..”

Knowing that this person is scared to death of Rena...well not Rena to be exact.. she is scared of Gekikara..even though they are the same person..but the personality is totally different..

“Hmmm..its time to have fun I guess.. “ I mumbled


Miichan  and Takamina just arrived at home. Suddenly they heard some people arguing in the house so they quickly open the front door.
Looks like there were three people arguing about something and one just stand there watching them.
Acting as the she is the most matured one in the house, Miichan is trying to butt in their argument .
“what happened?” asked Miichan.
Takamina just standing there beside Miichan looking confused, doesn’t really get what is really happening.
All four of them suddenly keep quiet and staring at Miichan....

But then..

Not long after that..

They started again their argument..

“YOU ARE THE ONE WHO FINISHED IT SO YOU WILL BUY! Said the other to another person.

Realizing that there's only one person who did not include in the argument ,Miichan decided to ask her.
“Kanon, what happen actually? Why are they arguing? What are they talking about?” asked Miichan.
“Well, from what I see...they were arguing about food.” Tell kanon.
Still doesn’t get the real situation, Miichan asking her again.
“food? What food??” asked Miichan again.
“hmm..Lovetan was asking those two about the food that she buy for Onee-chan that she put in the fridge because when she searched for the food, it was gone.. “ explained Kanon.
“*sighed* Kanon, bring you sister to the room.. I will take care of this.” Tell Miichan to Kanon.
“Okay, Onee-chan, lets go take a bath!” said Kanon to Takamina.
“Un! But after that i want to eat katsudon!! “ said Takamina happily.
With that, Kanon dragged Takamina to the room..

Miichan’s POV

Takamina should not know about this, If she knows that her favorite food was eaten by them, it takes us a looooooooong  time to calm her down unless there is someone who will buy it so that she will stop crying .
Hmmm.. looks like I should use this method to shut them up..

Taking a deep breath.....Miichan start shouting,



*still arguing*

" LISTEN!!! "

*Sounds familiar to some people isn’t?*  ;p




After  that the three of them stopped arguing and looked at Miichan.

“Finally....”  Miichan sighed in relief that her method worked..

“Let me speak.. *but* LET ME SPEAK!..
Now Lovetan , I want to know what is really happening .. care to explain?” I asked to Lovetan.

“The thing is, I bought Katsudon for Takamina that I promised her earlier but when I checked in the fridge, the katsudon was gone and I bet these two people are the one who ate it because I know they always did that!” Explained Lovetan.
“Now, Mayuyu, Jurina, why did you two eat it?” asked me to them.
“Obviously because we are hungry! That’s why we eat it..” answered Mayuyu with her cyborg face.

Taking a deep breath again..
Let me facepalmed myself first..for asking a stupid question just now.. =.=

“ I know, but you knew that was for Takamina right?”
“yeah, we know that was for Takamina but you know when people are hungry they just eat what they see without thinking you know… “ said Jurina still trying to find excuses.

Without wasting any time, I made a decision.

“how about you two go and buy it now since both of you are the one who ate it.” I told them.
“but, Jurina was the one who eat most of it!” protested Mayuyu.
“I said YOU TWO! So go now and buy it before Takamina searching for her Katsudon!” I yelled at them.
“Ughhh..Okay~~~ “ groaned Mayuyu while walking to the front door following by Jurina..

I’m glad that those two listened to me. Well, they have to listen to the older right..
Hmm.. I think Mayuyu is going to spend her time here again knowing that she always have a problem with her family..we doesn’t have any problem for her to stay in this house since she is our friend..
For Jurina.. still unknown… the author didn't tell me about her family.. :\
Suddenly , the front door opened again. Mayuyu walked inside and coming toward me. She hold out her hand like she's wanting something from me.

“What?” asked me confused.
“Money..I didn’t bring money with me..Jurina also doesn’t have money right now” said Mayuyu with a cyborg face.
“*sighed* here…” I gave some amount of money to her. Then, Mayuyu walked out of the house.

Even  though we were always like this, arguing over something, but actually we are happy to live together.. despite Takamina’s condition..we are taking care of her  together.
I know… deep inside her heart, Takamina is really missing someone,

someone that she really loves,

Someone who treat her like her sister,

someone that all of us in the house know..

Someone that leaving the house ..

leaving Takamina, us , to take care of something at somewhere we don’t even know her whereabout.

I hope one day she will be back..   :)

T.B.C about that?? good?? bad??
I don't know~~  :dunno:

I hope to get a good response from you guys~  :kneelbow:

*still thinking bout the title lol~*  :hee:
any suggestion?? just tell me!!
 :mon bye:

« Last Edit: September 09, 2017, 07:37:37 AM by chiqinna »

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Re: new fanfic: Chapter 1 [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #6 on: January 21, 2013, 04:49:21 PM »
yeah.  :twothumbs
nice story  :thumbup
i really love story plot especially takamina character  :P
haha.. i can imagine how takamina act like a child.. :inlove: it be must so cute  :drool:
please continue you story..
i will keep reading .. :P

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Re: new fanfic: Chapter 1 [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #7 on: January 21, 2013, 05:29:31 PM »
It sounds familiar ''listen listen listen'' !!! Let me speak !! Hahaha. Author~san I know what u mean. *p

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Re: new fanfic: Chapter 1 [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #8 on: January 21, 2013, 06:15:49 PM »
wow this story so interesting :fap

i liked when the characters mention the author in their thought XD

please continue  :twothumbs
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« Reply #9 on: January 21, 2013, 08:43:23 PM »
thanks for the update :)Def seems interesting with the two groups. So Takamina's condition makes her act like a kid? Really curious about her now. Looking forward to the next chap :)

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« Reply #10 on: January 21, 2013, 08:45:43 PM »
two words from me - SO GOOD!  :nya:

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Re: new fanfic: Chapter 1 [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #11 on: January 21, 2013, 11:38:39 PM »
mmmm let me guess that person is M.A right

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« Reply #12 on: January 22, 2013, 12:34:52 AM »
sounds interesting..

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Re: new fanfic: Chapter 1 [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #13 on: January 22, 2013, 06:51:35 AM »
Hai!!!!!!!!!!  :wave:
well, I'm so glad that its good.. hehe
before I reply all of your comments,

list of characters:

Kimoto Kanon
Takamina's younger sister.After their parent's both leaving them, Takamina is the one who was taking care of her but after the incident happen to Takamina, Kanon have to take care of her sister instead.

Watanabe Mayu
a smart girl, too smart that she sometimes skip school xD. About her parent, I don't want to tell you yet~ :P

Matsui Jurina
A girl that lives with them. Miichan have to take care of her too since she is still young. her family? I don't know either  :dunno:

Oota Aika
A friend of Mayu. She is the one who brings Mayu to the house that she lives in currently.

thats all I can tell for now~ :D


hazwani: thanks for the support! ^^ Takamina act like a cute kid.. imagine that! haha
Sydney W: hahaha  :lol: u know what I mean~  :kekeke:
matsuru: thanks! I might continue it!   XD
arrow27: i'm curious about her too.. hehe~ :)
miayaka: thank you so much for the comment!!  :shy2:
steven_0809: hehe...steven.. WRONG!!!  :hehehe: its not M.A ~ guess again!
haruko: I don't know if it interesting for the next chapter..hee.. please keep supporting!  :kneelbow:

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Re: new fanfic: Chapter 1+new characters [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #14 on: January 22, 2013, 11:13:13 PM »
Takamina acting as a cute kid... well that's interesting...

The someone that Takamina loves is probably Atsuko I guess...

Yeah... great beginning there... Thank you for the Atsumina fic.

Can't wait to see the next chapter

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« Reply #15 on: January 23, 2013, 12:46:15 AM »
this ish interesting~  :mon inluv:  can't wait for update :mon thumb:

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Re: new fanfic: Chapter 1+new characters [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #16 on: January 23, 2013, 01:06:47 AM »
I wanna read more about this fic ^^

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« Reply #17 on: January 23, 2013, 05:23:47 AM »
cisda83 - that someone is not Atsuko.. hehehe guess again! ^o^
FlameHazeKatsu - u think? hehe thanks for reading!  :D
kahem - thanks for reading! hehe~  :)

I will update chapter 2 after I got a suitable title for this fic~ haha xD

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Re: new fanfic: Chapter 2 [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #18 on: January 26, 2013, 04:29:34 AM »
The title for the fic is 'You are my sunshine'!!!!  :pepper: (don't ask me why I don't even know why LOLOLOL)

Chapter  2

*Conversation on the phone

“What do you want?” asked the person.

“I have a job for you” said the other person.

“Why me?” asked the person again.

“Because I want to... since you are fast, and plus you are a girl.” Explained the other person.

“What do I have to do?” asked her again.

“I just want you to find this one young girl...”said the other person.

“Who?” asked her again.

“I will send you the details later.” Replies the other person.

“Do you want me to kill her?”

“No, of course not. I know you are not that cruel to kill a girl, Black. I just want you to make sure that she is okay and safe. I have to go now. I will send you her picture and details so that you can find her.”

Conversation ended

*somewhere in the night

Maeda walked to the place where the gangsters have disturbed their territory.
Looks like they did not realized Maeda’s existence near them yet. They were busy playing cards.


“Can I join you guys?” Maeda finally came out of her hiding spot.
One of the guys stood up and walked towards Maeda.
“*smirk* you want to join us? Why don’t you entertain us here?” He said then winked at her.
“I have no problem with that.” Said Maeda while grinning.
“Hoho... guys! Looks like this girl want to entertain us here~” said the guy to his gang.
“Then show us what you got there...cute girl~~”said the guy while trying to put his arm around Maeda’s shoulder.

“I got... THIS!”Maeda said while kicking the guy on the stomach who was trying to touch her just now.
“Arrghhhh!!!” screamed the guy in pain.
The other member stops playing then all of them stood up.
“Oi! What are you doing? Do you know who we are?”Asked the other guy getting mad at Maeda’s action.
“Yeah I know what I am doing and I know who you are!”Said Maeda.
“Really? Then who send you here? Which group are you from?” asked the guy.
“No one send me here. I walked here by myself~ :P you don’t know me?”Asked Maeda rising one of her eyebrow still having her calm posture.
“Why would we know you? We were just asked by our Boss to take care of this place.”
“I see. And do you know this is my place and right now you are disturbing it!”Said Maeda.
“What? Aha~ so you are from top group huh...”
“I am. Now could you please get out of this place and don’t come again...or do you want me to send you out one by one?”
“This is our place now you see. You come here alone and we are many here. You can’t beat us that easily. “Smirked the guy.
“Now I’m mad. Don’t underestimate me you idiots!” said Maeda mad. Then she starts throwing a punch to the guy.

Then all of them start attacking Maeda. Easily Maeda dodge all the attacks.
“Is that all you got idiots!!” shout Maeda to them while giving a victory smile.
They were mad and start attacking Maeda again. Maeda also start punching and kicking them all at once.

All of them lay on the ground while holding their stomach and all because of the pain.
Then Maeda comes to one of the guy laying there and grab his hair.
“You are just underlings, you know, and you guys are no match with me. Send my regards to your Boss. Tell him don’t mess with Maeda Atsuko again. Understand?”
“M-Ma-Maeda! So you are-“
“Now you know who I am huh...too late.....

What are you waiting for? Want me to give more?” said Maeda.
All of them start running away ignoring the pain on their body.
“Its late already, I’m sleepy~” said Maeda yawning while putting her hands into her pockets and walks away.

After the bunch of gangster make sure they were already far from that place, they stopped running.
“*pant* that was crazy! If I knew that was her*pant* I would run already...” said one of them.
“You should be glad it was Maeda*pant*...if it was the other one...we are dead already!” said another one.
“You’re right...from what I heard, they are really strong even though they are girls...this is my first time facing her.”
“Yeah...but she’s hot.” Said one of the guys.
“Lets go, we should inform our Boss about this.”



“We’re back!!!” shouted Jurina while walking inside the house followed by Mayuyu.
Miichan and Lovetan were watching some tv shows.
“Welcome back~” Greeted Lovetan.
“Where’s the Katsudon?” asked Miichan.
“Here~” Jurina give the food to Miichan.
Takamina just got out from the kitchen.
“I can’t find my katsudon~~” Said her while pout sadly.
 “Takamina, come here...” Miichan gesture Takamina to come to her.
“Hai!” Takamina comes to Miichan and sit on her lap. Lap?
“I didn’t even ask you to sit on my lap...”Miichan said in her mind.
“Here... your katsudon!” Miichan said while giving the food to Takamina.

Seeing the food, Takamina’s eyes started sparkling and her smiles went wider.
“My katsudon!! I love Miichan!! Mmuaaahh~” said her while kiss Miichan on the cheek.
“Okayyyy~~ I know you love me~~ now kiss those two also...”Grinned Miichan pointing at Jurina and Mayuyu.
Takamina ran to Jurina and kissed her cheek.
Jurina just smile and kiss Takamina back on her right cheek.
“I love Juri-chan~~~” said Takamina happily.
“I love Takamina too~~~”repled Jurina smiling.

After that she went to Mayuyu to give a kiss.
“Yadaa~~” said Mayuyu try to avoid the kiss.
Takamina still want to kiss her. Mayuyu started running away from Takamina and they ran around in the house.
“Mayu-chan!!!!! Kiissuuu!!” Takamina ran to Mayuyu while pouted her lips to kiss Mayuyu.
The others just had fun laughing while watching the two.

After a while, Mayuyu give up due to tiredness, she finally got kissed by Takamina on the cheek. “I love Mayu-chan!!!”

“hahaha!!! Mayuyu~~ you know even though she is a midget, she have more stamina than you. You are smart...but sometimes you are dumb too...hahaha!” said Jurina laughing.
“Shut up Jurina!” Said Mayuyu breathless while glaring at the laughing girl.

They are getting ready to sleep because they have school except for Takamina and Miichan.

Takamina already sleep in her bedroom with Kanon.
Usually Mayuyu will sleep with Jurina while Lovetan with Miichan.
Lovetan comes into Mayuyu and Jurina’s room. Mayuyu and Jurina were lying on their bed already.

“Mayuyu, can I borrow your phone for a while? I need to text my mom about something. I forgot to charge my phone’s battery...” asked lovetan.
“No” said Mayuyu handing her phone to Lovetan.
“Thank you~”Lovetan turning her back from them and smirked.

“Done! Here~” said Lovetan after finish doing her ‘work’. She gives the phone back to the owner...

After Lovetan getting out from the room...

she stopped for a while...

and then gave an evil smile to the readers... (Imagine it yourself okay~)[/size]

[to be continued...]

I feel so lame right now~
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Re: You Are My Sunshine - Chapter 2 [atsumina+other pairings]
« Reply #19 on: January 26, 2013, 04:59:20 AM »
Thanks for the update, like how the story is progressing!
Atsuko sure kicked butt :D She's awesome :) & such a cute scene where Minami gave everyone a "thank you" kiss & their reactions lol.
Wonder what was up with Lovetan at the end.
Looking forward to the next chapter :D

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