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Title: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: lil_hamz on November 02, 2008, 06:54:55 PM
I’m beginning to think that continuous fics like ‘Guardian Angel’ and ‘Glass Slipper’ should have been given their own threads. That would have reduced any confusion pertaining to which are one-shots and which aren’t. In view of the fact that it’s probably too late for the above mentioned stories, I’m starting this thread for the new fic I’m working on. I hope you readers like this :oops:
 


Merry Go Round

Chapter 1


“How was the movie?”

“I was reading the Japanese subtitles while listening to the English words.”

As usual, the answered she obtained was not in any way related to the question posed. Already expecting something like that to happen, the younger persisted.

“I meant in terms of the plot. Don’t you think it was really sweet?”

“I guess it was though I can’t really understand it.”

“USO!”

With eyebrows flying all over the place and a highly exaggerated expression, the one with brownish hair exclaimed.

“Won’t it be weird to fall in love with your best friend?”

Spinning around to face the young woman whom she had literally dragged out of her home to accompany her for the day, the elder motioned with her finger.

“It’s like saying WE fell in love. It’ll be strange.”

With that, she quickened her pace as she spotted something in a nearby shop window that caught her eye. In her haste, she failed to notice the hurt and disappointed expression that surfaced on her friend’s face.

Am I nothing more than a friend to you?

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“Ohayo!”

Breezing in through the door of their dressing room, the rarely early latest occupant of the room hollered, seemingly to be in a particularly excellent mood.

“What are you so happy about?”

Catching her gaze in the mirror, Niigaki Risa asked her long time radio show partner and team mate.

“Something good happened.”

“Uh huh.”

She smiled as she slipped the tube of mascara back into her make-up pouch. Then moving around in her seat to face the beaming girl, she rested her arms on the back of the chair before asking.

“Wanna tell me about it?”

“I thought you’ll never ask!”

Clearing her throat as if in preparation for an important speech, Kamei Eri began.

“I already told Sayumi last night and I’m telling you now as my best-est friends should be the first ones to know.”

“Go on.”

Risa didn’t know that the amused smile she had on this moment would soon vanish when she heard what Eri had to say.

“We are a couple now.”

Taking some time to process the words that left Eri’s mouth, Risa replayed them in her mind.

We are a couple now.
Does that mean Kame has a boyfriend?
Wouldn’t that jeopardize her career?
Should I say something and put a stop to it?
But in what capacity?
It was Kame’s personal life after all.


“Are you saying you have a boyfriend?”

The disbelief was evident in her voice but Risa couldn’t conceal her astonishment.   

“Not boyfriend silly, girlfriend. And you don’t have to worry about anyone finding out about this. Sayumi wouldn’t tell. I believe you would keep this a secret. Besides, my girlfriend is Ai-chan.”

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My girlfriend is Ai-chan.

These four words swirled continuously in Risa’s mind and try as she might, she couldn’t forget the look of joy on Eri’s face as she said those words. While she wanted very much to feel genuinely happy for her close friend, she realized it was an impossible task.

You said it’ll be weird to fall in love with your best friend.
Yet you agreed to be with Eri.
Did I lose my chance because I’m your best friend?
If that’s the reason then I wished I wasn’t.
I don’t want to… I hate… being just a best friend.


She didn’t know it but the diary sitting on the table before her had been torn apart to shreds, the ruined pieces of papers strewn all across the room. Crying heartbreakingly, Risa buried her face deep into her arms to minimize the sobbing noise. She didn’t want anyone in her family to discover her weeping.

There was a window in front of her desk and it opened out to the streets below and the buildings in the distance. On a clear day, the breathtaking sun set was mesmerizing and Risa loved to write in her diary as she sat in the seat and took in how beautiful everything was. Except that today the view was anything but spectacular. Everything was coated in a dull shade of grey and nothing held any meaning. Something departed from the world that day - Niigaki Risa’s radiant smile.
 
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@stefy: There is no obvious AiEri in this chapter yet but it’s only the first so….be patient  :P
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: Estrea on November 02, 2008, 07:02:24 PM
Oh my god, AiEri. GOOD JOB!

-sits on sofa and waits for more- XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: Yuuyami on November 02, 2008, 07:09:53 PM
Holy shizzle AiEri xDDDD GJ!!!

Jesus, I had the exact same reaction as Essy-chan, roffle xDDD.

Anywho...

Awww! Poor Gaki-san!! That really sucks, not dating the one you love just because your lover thinks it's weird to be in love with your best friend... To be honest, I do understand what Aichan's thinking. The transition from best friends to lovers is hardly there so it's not exactly... o_O

But holy shit! AiEri in a main story!? XD Looking forward to the rest, Hamminz~!

PS. Did Captain and Momo's Merry go Round have any influence on this? xD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: ringo-hime on November 02, 2008, 07:33:04 PM
awww...poor Gaki. she'll get wat she wants in the near future..XD

so its AiKame XD Ohh.. in the start..ofc it'll me TakaGaki aye?

cnt waaiit~ yay~ :]
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: lonewind on November 02, 2008, 07:50:53 PM
whoa! :( Gaki-chan...

AiKamei at the start makes this really interesting!! keep up the good work
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: Sukoshi on November 02, 2008, 08:01:06 PM
“Won’t it be weird to fall in love with your best friend?”
...
“It’s like saying WE fell in love. It’ll be strange.”

Ouch!  Take that back Ai chan! XD

Quote

“Not boyfriend silly, girlfriend. And you don’t have to worry about anyone finding out about this. Sayumi wouldn’t tell. I believe you would keep this a secret. Besides, my girlfriend is Ai-chan.”


SayuE....I mean TakaKame?!  WOW!  Didn't see that coming at all!  that was a pleasant surprise!  I can't wait to see how this pairing turns out.  While Estrea is waiting on the sofa, I'm gonna stalk you from the bushes  :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: meowz on November 02, 2008, 09:43:54 PM
^  :lol: And i'll be staking out your backyard i guess

Well, AiEri certainly was unexpected. Looking forward to seeing how you're gonna make their relationship 'work'. They seem to be another one of those pairs that don't seem to click that way, well to me at least. Maybe its just cause its not often seen
But judging from your title, its gonna end up takagaki anyway right?  :P
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on November 02, 2008, 10:38:06 PM
I hope you readers like this :oops:
What are you thinking!? Of course we will. Because it's written by you and we love you!! :mon innocent:

Awww, Ai-chan is ruining the TakaGaki!!! :mon whine:
But I'll admit, I'm intrigued by this Ai/Eri. Very rare indeed. :mon cigar:

Something departed from the world that day - Niigaki Risa’s radiant smile.
Say it ain't so!!! :mon whimper: :mon cry:

I'm not seeing the "merry-ness"!!! :depressed: But I'll keep reading!! :lol:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on November 02, 2008, 11:24:15 PM
#$&%^#)&*%?!?!?!? AI/ERI?! WHOA MY GOD YEEEEEESSSS. <3 It's a TakaGakiKame triangle-like thing!! *can't find the right words to use because she's just too damn happy* I haven't read a good AiEri (Or TakaGakiKame) for a while now, considering it's not too popular. Waaaaaaaaiiii~~ *spins around*

Dangit hammy, you just put me on an all time high. XD I can't wait to see how this story unfolds. Poor Gaki-san... T_T
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: stefy on November 03, 2008, 04:02:33 AM
weeee~ AiEri AiEri AiEri~!!

man you work fast lol.

-does cartwheels while waiting for next chapter-
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: YumePouk on November 04, 2008, 12:25:42 PM
I'm new here and I find your story is really Great :D :heart: _ :heart:
and the pairing AiEi is so lovely^^  :mon lovelaff:
I'm a bit sad for Gaki-san  :gmon tears:
Can't wait to read what happen next >_< :p

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: chibilolli on November 04, 2008, 11:19:06 PM
Ehhhh? WTF? *chokes on tea*

In the e-mail I sent you the other day, I said I couldn't envisage Ai x Eri.
I've read this, and I still can't accept it *sob sob* :cry:

Shall I keep reading to see what happens??? Of course I will, even if it upsets me. Partly because I know it's going to remind me of Shirow's 'super short sexy one shot'

...and I like the way you write :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: JFC on November 05, 2008, 06:08:22 AM
TAKAKAMEI?!?!?!
:mon spit:


Risa = :gmon tears:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: lollipopgirl on November 05, 2008, 01:21:30 PM
Nooo, what hope do I have when even Hammy-sama can't remain faithful to the TakaGaki  :gyaaah:
I'm don't usually feel the Ai/Eri much (sometimes I do) either so hopefully (I think) you can change that for me ;) But knowing you Gaki can't stay depressed for too long, will it mean you'll get your Gaki/Shige or will TakaGaki prevail in the end? And which do I even want :O?

From the get go the writer means I'm interested in the fic, but then you add all the cool people so I'm even more intrigued... Don't you dare leave us hanging though, you've done that enough with 'Please Take Care of My Club', 'Guardian Angel' & 'Glass Slipper' so I don't think you can really pick on Essy about slow updating missy  :gmon hot:

 :gmon heartu:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 1 (11/03)
Post by: lil_hamz on November 07, 2008, 09:54:42 AM
Chapter 2


Like clockwork, Risa gathered her belongings and stuffed them into her bag absentmindedly. She didn’t bother to fold her clothes in a neat pile or separate her cosmetics into their respective pouches. She was like a robot, only talking and giving a reaction when spoken to.

“Is there something wrong with Niigaki-san?”

Observing Risa’s movements as she stood at her locker, fifteen year old Mittsui Aika whispered to the senior who shared the same dresser as her.

“Who? Niigaki-san?”

Taking her concentration away from what she was currently doing, Kusumi Koharu stole an obvious glance at her sub-leader before going back to removing the glittering clips in her hair.

“She’s probably tired. She was really giving her all during the concert earlier.”

Not agreeing with Koharu’s explanation, Aika shifted her attention back to Risa.

Something must have happened.
Niigaki-san seems depressed about something.
She was giving her all just now.
Maybe a little too much, like she wants to forget something by channeling all her energy into performing.


“Sayu you have a fever!”

The anxious voice of Eri brought Aika out of her reverie and she turned her head to the source of the commotion.

“I’m fine. Nothing an aspirin wouldn’t fix.”

Pulling her arm away from Eri’s hands, Sayumi clearly wanted to reduce the body contact between them.

“You need to see a doctor…but I have a date with Ai-chan… ”

“I’m really okay. Ai-chan is already at the door. Don’t keep her waiting.”

Pushing her in the direction of the exit, Sayumi shooed her best friend out determinedly even though Eri kept giving her worried looks.

It isn’t just Niigaki-san. Michishige-san seems troubled by something as well.

The relationship between Aika and Sayumi had increased tremendously after they played fairies in the Cinderella musical together and Aika could now tell easily if something was different about her. Aika had always liked Risa even before she entered Morning Musume and with her newfound affinity with Sayumi, she found herself fretting over her seniors. However, she didn’t know how she could help or what she could do. She was after all just a Hachiki member and still a child.

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After arriving home, Sayumi felt too exhausted to do anything. With what little strength she had remained, she made her way rather wobbly to her bedroom. The house was empty except for herself as both her mother and sister had gone home to Yamaguchi to visit their father. Alone in the home, there was no one she could rely on in her current state. It occurred to her that she could call Eri if her illness became too much for her to bear. But the thought of Eri being with Ai made it difficult to breathe. Hot tears rolled down endlessly as the image of them having a leisurely meal at a nice restaurant appeared in her mind.

The person who should be dining with Eri should be me, ME!!

Using her arm to cover her eyes to block out the illumination shining from the light on her room ceiling, Sayumi fell into a restless sleep.   

When her eyes reopened, her lips felt chapped and her throat dry. Deciding to get a drink of water from the kitchen, she tried to sit up only to fall back weakly onto the bed.

Why am I so useless? I can’t even do anything right. No wonder Eri doesn’t like me.

Leaning heavily against the wall and furniture, Sayumi slowly made her way outside and into the kitchen. With trembling hands, she tilted the water jug and filled a glass half full with water. After taking a few sips from the glassware, she proceeded to return to her room to rest further when whiteness overtook her vision and she swayed precariously and her legs gave way almost immediately after. The glass tumbler shattered into multiple pieces and lay scattered around the area. Reaching for the nearest piece just a short distance away, Sayumi picked it up with shaking hands and within that moment, contemplated slicing it across her wrist.

The insistent banging on her door prevented her from turning that thought into action and she gazed feebly up at it. In the next few seconds, the wooden structure burst open and a very nervous looking Risa barged in. Seeing the piece of glass in her hand, Risa grabbed at it and held it away from Sayumi’s outstretched arms. Throwing it aside, she lifted Sayumi by wrapping her arms around the taller girl’s torso and helped her back onto the bed. Surprisingly, the process went by rather smoothly even though Risa was considerably shorter.

After laying her carefully on the bed, Risa went to the bathroom and came back carrying a small tub and cotton hand towel. Rinsing the cloth inside the basin, she wringed it till it was damp and then placed it on Sayumi’s forehead. The cool sensation was incredibly comfortable on her feverish skin and Sayumi let out a soft sigh without realizing it. Once again she slipped into a dreamless sleep. Only this time, she had someone by her side.   



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I apologize for this chapter which was anything but good. But lil Hammy ain't feeling too good mentally and physically. I wrote this in a really short while to take my mind away from things. I promise to reply to comments soon. I love reading them all :heart: It makes me really happy that you readers like this story :wub:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: Sukoshi on November 07, 2008, 10:55:10 AM
aww poor Hammy *huggle* *huggle* I hope you feel better soon~

okay, now that I've hugged you, it's time to yell at you XD 
sucks in some air and yells out "HAMmy Saaan!  stop trying to kill our beloved idols!"  :scolding:

lol...okay that might be a little much.   I think I'll have to throw in another hug for that one XD  Plus I'm totally lying with my demand (that's like asking you to stop writing such awesome stories)

now on with the story commenting.  I found the Aika part a little weird but that's probably because people hardly write about her (plus I was a little worried she had a thing for Gaki...that would weird me out cause she's like the baby of the group to me)  but then the focus shifting to Sayu and that made me go eek!

Sayu distancing herself from Eri.  That's heartbreaking to me *pouts*  I hope Eri sent Risa to check on Sayu so I can forgive Eri for going on the date with Ai chan.   Even though I want to cheer for TakaKame since I'm cheering for Estrea's AiShige...I can't help but feel that Eri's being unfaithful even though she so isn't XD  and do I sense a possible GakiShige?  If so that would be really different.  I like how everyone is mixing it up, it's all very fresh and intriguing. 
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: writerjunkie on November 07, 2008, 05:12:53 PM
ha AiEri?! My reaction is the same as everyone else lol but i like it though I want to see how it turns out. Poor Risa and Sayu I like this fic. I want to see what you'll do next :D  I'm already hooked to it.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: chibilolli on November 07, 2008, 05:20:21 PM
Uwahh~

I'm still struggling with the Ai x Eri pairing, dunno why. Maybe because it took me quite a while to get in to Ai x Risa (never used to like Ai), and now I'm in so deep with them. Risa x Sayumi? I'm not saying anything......

I hope you get well / feel better soon :heart:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: Estrea on November 07, 2008, 05:27:57 PM
Oi Hammy, quit making your characters emo just cos you're feeling emo! Lol.

I'm liking the shift to Aika perspective in the first part though, she's observant enough to notice these things, and it's always good to have a 3rd person commenting on the events, just to give a different view. Nice job. ;)

GakiShige huh? Comfort pairing cos they both got rejected. Why does that feel like what Sonata-san wrote in that one story --- you know which one. :P But will it go back to KameShige and TakaGaki in the end? Will you revert to your usual habits...or fall to the dark side of wild experimentation? Do it! Do it now! XD

Seriously though, stop torturing Gaki. What kind of a fan are you. Haha. Actually, I'm not much better so I'll stop now. XD Write more when you can, kay?

Can't believe I actually commented...lol.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on November 08, 2008, 12:57:53 AM
Oh no, Sayu too?! T____T Eri, what in the world have you done?! I love you and all, but you tend to cause quite a few problems...  :doh:

I'm still interested in seeing AiEri...considering I can actually stomach that. xD I can stomach almost every Eri pairing. :lol: Get better soon. <3
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: ringo-hime on November 08, 2008, 02:22:44 AM
OHH~ Prince Gaki to the rescue~  :wub:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on November 08, 2008, 06:45:34 AM
You are breaking my heart! After reading file 5 of Nocture, gahhh. I'm so...sad.
On the plus side though, you are making Mittsi into such a cutie!! :inlove: Still don't like her much. :P
Awww, Sayu.... :mon surr: Jeez, I don't know who I feel worse for now.
But great update, I did enjoy it. Even though it.....hurts me. :mon cheek:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: meowz on November 08, 2008, 04:04:33 PM
aww Shige-san... :(
I kept hoping the one banging on the door was Kame

Don't worry, the chapter was great, just short  :P
Get better soon!

Here's something I just found that might encourage you a bit  :lol:
(http://aewen.com/momusu/kamei/img/aewen539.jpg)
Not the best photoshop, but not too bad XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: takagakifan on November 09, 2008, 01:57:40 AM
^ wow that's pretty darn awesome!

Chapter 1 Reactions:

Aww Ai being slow and absentminded about gaki's feelings :bigdeal: wait!!! :mon spit: Ai Eri (though I can imagine this and its not so bad but seeing how i'm a tad biased...)  :mon whine:

 :mon ref: Oh no Risa lost her smile!!!!1

Chapter 2 Reactions:

Whoa Aika's pretty perceptive on her senpai's moods  :monk gboy: but koha... :dunno:

Aww Sayu has a fever and she making it worse being depressed over Eri but oh ho what's this :cool1: Gaki to the rescue!!! (heehee i do like the possible gakishige pairing) but i rooting for a takagaki and kameshige happly ever after ending teehee
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: lollipopgirl on November 09, 2008, 05:57:42 AM
WAAAAH~! What is it about Sayu that just makes her so... killable, to you *pouts*
I smellz me some GakiShige coming on, at least for the meantime till Ai/Eri can sort themselves out... I can do GakiShige, such a cute couple :mon inluv: but still covering my eyes at the mention of Ai/Eri XD
I wonder why Gaki was at Sayu's door to begin with, and how did she get the strength to barge it open? :O Super Prince Gaki :drool: :wub:

The chapter may have been rushed and thus written differently, but it was kinda nice, it really fitted with Sayu's mood, poor girl :(

I hope you feel better soon Hammy dear *huggles you*
If it helps, I can be motherly like Gaki-san :heart:
*tucks Hammy into a nice warm bed with a glass of milk and cookies while singing a lullaby in my (not so) fabulous voice* :)

Anyway, my point... I'm looking forward to where you take us, as per usual :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: JFC on November 11, 2008, 06:40:18 AM
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww...Sayu too? Probably shouldn't be surprised, considering...well, you know. But...still. :cry:


What I found curious was how Risa turned up at just the right time to stop Sayu from doing something rash. That timing couldn't have been coincidence, right? :?


Aika's like a little imouto worried about her onee-chans. :oops:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: lil_hamz on November 12, 2008, 10:38:10 AM
Chapter 1

@Estrea: Wow what a rare visitor :on woohoo:

@Yuuyami: I really liked Momo & Captain’s song so I used it as the title :kekeke:

@ringo-hime: I don’t know about that yet. She might, or she might not :whistle:

@shadowolf8: Thanks I’m glad you liked reading it  :k-hello:

@Sukoshi: You really like hiding in bushes don’t you  :k-wink:

@meowz: Maybe you should accompany Sukoshi in that bush. As of now I still don’t know who’s gonna end up with who :dunno:

@SBK: Awww thanks. I love you too :luvluv2:

@SxY: Hee hee, I think it’s funny how you start your recent comments with &*#$^&%$#^@^)( :wahaha:

@stefy: I hope you’re not still doing those cartwheels :mon misch:

@YumePouk: Ahhh a new reader. Thanks for commenting. Looking forward to more of your replies :shy2:

@Lolli: I can’t believe my eyes. You’re actually here. And commenting too. Awww I’m touched :mon inluv:

@JFC: Always great to see you around :mon dance:

@LLPG: My lawyer will defend me regarding this matter –shifts aside-. As Hammy’s lawyer (who is actually me with a mop on my head), please allow me to present some evidence proving how my client has been a faithful TakaGaki shipper since the beginning of her H!P fandom. At last count, she had written TakaGaki 8 centric fics, 3 KameMame ones and 2 GakiShige stories. The figures speak for themselves. Hence, I rest my case :bingo:


Chapter 2

@Sukoshi: Oh no Sukoshi-chan is mad :on_plug:

@writerjunkie: I’ve been reading your fic. I’m happy that you’re writing as it means more great stories to read :k-thrilled:

@Lolli: Thankies. You've posted twice in a row. I’m having high hopes of seeing you around more :mon thumb:

@Estrea: I can’t help it! This might sound bad but I like torturing Gaki :mon heh:

@SxY: Lol But Sayu was alright in the end :mon lol:

@ringo-hime:  I really appreciate how you’ve been commenting more these days :omamori:

@SBK: -Hugs SKB to make her feel better- You gotta start getting used to this cus things are gonna get worse :on speedy:

@meowz: That’s an awesome PS creation! Thanks for posting it. Pretty drool worthy I must say :luvluv1:

@TKGF: When are you gonna update your story? I wanna read more :on hypto: Write more *chants*

@LLPG: Blame Sayu for being so fair/pale. She looks like she is lacking blood all the time. How about Popeye Prince Gaki? She downed a whole can of spinach before she barged in :tama-laff: *Hammy falls into a nice sleep with LLPG’s beautiful singing*

@JFC: That will be explained in the next chapter. Which I'll try to post soon. Though with my exams... :on study:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on November 13, 2008, 01:13:12 AM
@meowz
Holy crap, that AiEri pic... :luvluv1:

And good luck with your exams, hammy! ^^
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: takagakifan on November 13, 2008, 01:14:14 AM
*stares at the ball go back and forth and back and forth...* :dizzy: ZZzzz  Huh!!! Must. Write. New chapter :mon study:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 2 (11/07)
Post by: lil_hamz on November 27, 2008, 05:38:32 PM
Chapter 3


"Ai-chan, AI-CHAN!"

"Hai!"

The elder's eyes refocused onto Eri's face as she was abruptly jolted from her daydream. As the pair waited for the service staff to set up the apparatus required for the Shabu-shabu meal, Ai's mind had unwittingly drifted off. Her thoughts were as disconnected as the air pockets bubbling on the top layer of the broth which was contained in a circular metal pot.

"You and Gaki-san are so similar. No wonder you're best friends."

"Huh?"

Not quite understanding what Eri meant, Ai looked at her with a confused expression on her face. Shaking her head slightly and hence causing her fringe to fall over her eyes, Eri reached for the chopsticks placed neatly on the table in front of her. She was all ready to tuck into a steamy hot dinner and explaining matters further to Ai wasn't at the top of her current list of priorities.

"What would you like to eat Ai-chan? I'll cook it for you."

Smiling sweetly as she submerged a piece of meat into the boiling water, Eri tilted her head and beamed expectantly at her new girlfriend. Her action was undoubtedly adorable and the simple act brought a smile onto Ai's face. This was the exact reason why she had agreed so readily to be with Eri. Besides the fact that she was confident the younger would never put anyone else before her, her main reason for reciprocating the rokkie's affections was how unbelievably endearing she was. Anyone who knew the nineteen year old could ascertain to its verity.

"I want that piece."

Pointing to the meat dangling between Eri's chopsticks, Ai grinned mischievously at her. There were plenty of various types of meat on the table all separated in suitable portions. Yet Ai was determined to claim the slice of beef which was in the process of entering Eri's mouth.

"But I was going to eat it."

Whining like a small child, Eri shook her shoulders from side to side and pouted at the leader, declining her blatant request. From a bystander's point of view, passing this thin serving to Ai wasn't a big problem, in fact it was obvious that the shorter haired woman was just teasing her. Nevertheless, being slow animals, the incarnation of an adorable turtle did not realize Ai's intentions. The teasing escalated into more serious play and resulted in Ai chasing Eri around the private room. As Eri tried her hardest to hide away the morsel of food protectively, her fleeting concentration on Ai's whereabouts allowed the smaller but stronger woman to tackle the shapely girl onto the sofa. Yes, there were large and cushy couches in the VIP rooms of this up market Shabu-shabu restaurant.

Lying on her back with one hand still holding onto the wooden chopsticks, Eri stared with widening eyes at the perpetrator of the sudden suggestive deed. In the modestly illuminated room, Ai's eyes caught the reflecting light and shined with a wondrous gleam. Extending her neck to bite at the rapidly cooling red meat, Ai chewed slowly, savoring it to the very last mouthful. When she finally swallowed the piece, she removed the rendered useless utensils from Eri's fingers and threw them carelessly to the side. Now that there was nothing superfluous holding them back, Ai went in for the kill. Her prey whimpered sensitively at her rough advances. Even so she soon gave in to her repeated demands. Takahashi Ai was Kamei Eri's first girlfriend and it was she, who obtained Eri's very first time.

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The icy winds that caressed her face insistently roused Sayumi. Opening her eyes, she was met with the view of someone or something standing at her window. Squinting to see better, she saw the shadowy outline of what she thought was an unknown intruder. Shrieking hysterically at the top of her voice, she backed warily away from the trespasser. Startled by her frightening screams which could have easily woken the dead, the blackish form whipped around and started making its way towards her. Screaming even louder, Sayumi grabbed at the nearest objects within reach and threw them at the approaching being.

“Ow! Stop it! SAYUMIN!”

Recognizing the voice as a familiar one, Sayumi halted in mid throw and gapped stupidly at the face which had now become apparent as she came to stand where light fell.

“Gaki-san?”

“Is this how you repay me after I saved you and even cleaned your house?”

Rubbing at her sore head with one palm, Risa grumbled with an annoyed look on her face.

“Am I dreaming? Gaki-san’s at my house?”

“Try pinching and see.”

Going to sit down on the bed next to Sayumi, she glared hard at her ebony haired kouhai.

“OW!!”

Clasping her cheek with both her hands, Risa slapped at the fingers which were squeezing at the flesh on her face.

“I meant pinch yourself, NOT ME!!”

Returning her angry stares with a sheepish grin, Sayumi replied cheekily.

“You claim you didn’t feel pain when others pinched your cheeks. So I thought why not.”

“Damn you Michishige.”

Dropping the ‘san’ while referring to her and completely disregarding her assortment of nicknames, Risa growled with obvious displeasure.

“Since you’re well enough to bully your sub-leader, I presume you’re fine. I’m leaving.”

Spinning around to pick up her cell phone and wallet from the dresser, Risa was about to exit the room when Sayumi called her back.

“Gaki-san! Stay with me?”

Her second sentence was significantly softer than the first and it almost sounded like a desperate plead for help. Stunned by the surprising request, Risa turned back.

“Sayumin?”

“It’s late. The last train would have stopped running by now. I don’t want you wasting money on cab fare.”

Frantically trying to think up excuses to conceal her true motive for keeping Risa, Sayumi blabbered on. She didn’t want to appear weak in front of anyone. She was poison tongue Sayumi and masking her real character behind that term was the only way by which she could protect herself. Pulling Sayumi into her arms, Risa rubbed her back gently and ran her fingers through her length of hair.

“I know you’re hurt and I can understand your pain. But don’t harm yourself to release that frustration.”

Recalling the image of Sayumi gripping tightly onto the shard of broken glass when she first barged into the dwelling, Risa was aware of her unbalanced emotions.

“I’m not…I didn’t…”

She refused to admit her unrequited feelings for Eri and she hated herself for being so vulnerable. Nonetheless Sayumi couldn’t deny the pain that was numbing her heart and the tears that had began falling from her eyes.

“Rely on me Sayumin. Whenever you need a shoulder to cry on, I will be here.”

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@SxY: Thanks gal. I have one more paper to go and I’m done! :muffin:

@TGF: I’m so happy my hypnotizing is working on you. Sorry to hear about how stressful school is but hang on! You can do it! ;)
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: Estrea on November 27, 2008, 06:01:58 PM
Omg seme!Ai. I love ya for it. :lol:

How do you do it Hammy? Should I be calling you Ninja Hamz from now on? XD I don't understand how you manage to write and post so fast given...you know. XD *amazed*

*goes back to lurk again* Haha.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on November 27, 2008, 06:03:30 PM
*dances around* Update!!! :heart:
Gahhhh, Ai/Eri were so cute!!! :inlove: Eri seems so naive to Ai-chan's sexiness!! :lol: I still have to get used to them together but it's pretty cute.
Bwahahaha~ When Gaki was all "OW!!", I lost it. XD Awww, Gaki's such a sweetie. :heart:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: chibilolli on November 27, 2008, 06:09:38 PM
Woo Hoo~ An Update!!!

I will edit my comment when I come back from my Japanese lesson, and I'm a bit more 'on the ball' XD

EDIT: Yeah I said I'd do this after my Japanese class but my teacher asked if we all wanted to go to the pub, so of course I couldn't decline!!! :D :P

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Hmm...Ai and Eri, Eri and Ai. Still kinda struggling with this couple, but that's because of my own problems and not your writing skills. You're slowly getting there with me, but I have this feeling that once you make me accept Ai and Eri, things will happen and TakaGaki will surface.

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Screaming even louder, Sayumi grabbed at the nearest objects within reach and threw them at the approaching being.

Man, I would love it if Sayumi threw stuff at me. Wouldn't that be something to tell your grandkids.

Me: 'Hey kids, see this book, Michishige Sayumi threw it at me!'
Kids: 'Oooooooh'
Me: 'Do you wanna touch the book?'
Kids: 'Yeah! Can we? Please...'
Me: 'Tough shit! You can't!'

It'd be like a war story...

 :roll:

Risa's really sweet to clean up Sayumi's house and wait for her to wake up. But then I suppose she hasn't got much else to do apart from mope. I'm gonna assume she's already aware of Sayumi's feelings for Eri. Maybe she can scheme!!!

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“I meant pinch yourself, NOT ME!!”

As well as having something thrown at me by Sayumi, I'd also love to pinch Risa's cheeks. I don't think it'd go down too well at a handshake event, but it could be worth a try, for the lols! I'll put it on the 'to do' list along with all the other things. I think you should pray that you never meet me in real life, at a Morning Musume concert, after I've had a bit to drink!!!

Sayumi just wants someone to comfort her. I'd be like that too.
Will they find love in comfort???
♪ twilight zone music ♪

I can't wait for the next chapter. Leave all your other fan fics and update this one ASAP! (after you do your Uni stuff obviously)
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: writerjunkie on November 27, 2008, 06:14:20 PM
YAY! an update!!  :cow: Haha wow dominate Ai hehe...I think you know what I would say about that. And aww poor Sayu she's so heartbroken. Sayu/Risa? hmmm that's something I never thought of, but hey you're making it work! They were so cute in this chapter. I hope you update soon! ^_^ I'll be watching this fic.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on November 27, 2008, 08:02:44 PM
Woohoo, Seme!Ai!! :cow: Ohohoho...in a restaurant, I see? (Though it was a private room...)

But now I feel back for Sayu... T_T Perhaps a GakiShige will emerge? :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: stefy on November 28, 2008, 03:39:03 AM
Ninja Hammy!

WHOOOAAAAAAAAAAA AIERI AIERI VERY HAWT AIERI!
Hmm... Gaki-san sure is Mr. Super Duper Nice Guy (I mean Mrs and woman) to willingly support Sayumi that quickly.. What about her feelings for Ai-chan???? Has she given up hope already?!

Yea I totally agree with Essy... how do you write and post so fast?! Teach me teach me!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: Fenrir on November 28, 2008, 10:48:05 AM
*Fenfen's head is trying to wrap around the concept of AiEri* Very interesting...

 Seme Ai-chan! She's like a tiger! Go eat up the turtle! XD Being the top of the food chain, she might as well gobble up the bean and the cat as well.  :P :lol:


Gobble, gobble... turkey... mmmm...*is very random tonight*
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: Sukoshi on November 28, 2008, 12:26:46 PM
Wah!  Suppa Hammy!  Two updates in one day?  USO! 

Ai...Eri...what?  (http://www.picamatic.com/show/2008/11/28/02/16/1447209_40x40.gif) (http://www.picamatic.com/view/1447209_pen1_41/) *ahem*  I think not only were the chopsticks most likely tossed to the ground but my chin as well.  So didn't see that coming!  wah Ai chan (http://www.picamatic.com/show/2008/11/28/02/13/1447196_40x40.gif) (http://www.picamatic.com/view/1447196_pen1_37/)

Sayu screaming and pinching Gaki...lol awesome  :lol:  Major points to caring Gaki....I just might get conflicted over which pairing I want XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: YumePouk on November 28, 2008, 08:57:14 PM
Chapter 2:
I felt sad for Sayumi  :gmon tears:
Gaki at the end is so kind  :heart:
it was a great chapter

Chapter 3: :mon lovelaff: :mon lovelaff:
AiEri sweet and Hawt moment in he restaurant hihi!
I feel there will be a GakiSayu pairing  :mon misch:
 :mon thumb: chapter I'm impateint to read your next one ^-^
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: takagakifan on November 28, 2008, 10:43:06 PM
Yay an update!!! Gotta finishing eating thanksgiving leftovers first and once my hunger headache is gone def. commenting... maybe or i might get the -itis and sleep then comment :P
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Finished eating!!!!
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AiEri... Ai & Eri... Eri & Ai... *sigh* I can't see it I don't know maybe its the takagaki fangirl in me but... I mean the scene was cute yet... i don't dislike this pairing... I've got it!!

Gaki and Sayu! That's why! Of course why couldn't i see this sooner... there's no way i could enjoy AiEri unless Gakishige were happy but Sayu is suicidial and Gaki can't smile anymore there AiEri= no-no

P.S Thanks for your concern its my own fault not managing my time properly and what not... but learned my lesson (not really will most likely happen in the future) and im hoping for the best... lol i don't stay stressed for too long more of a mellow person :pimp:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: JFC on November 30, 2008, 04:06:12 AM
Chapter 3
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"What would you like to eat Ai-chan? I'll cook it for you."

Smiling sweetly as she submerged a piece of meat into the boiling water, Eri tilted her head and beamed expectantly at her new girlfriend. Her action was undoubtedly adorable and the simple act brought a smile onto Ai's face. This was the exact reason why she had agreed so readily to be with Eri.
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm...can't help but wonder here. Did she really agree to be with Eri because of Eri, or might she have just seen Eri (consciously or subconsciously) as a way out to avoid something/someone else? :?



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*TAKAKAMEI @ SHABUSHABU JOINT*
Okay, the teasing Eri bit was cute (especially Eri's whining/pouting), the chasing Eri around was funny, and the rest...well....:drool:



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“Am I dreaming? Gaki-san’s at my house?”

“Try pinching and see.”

Going to sit down on the bed next to Sayumi, she glared hard at her ebony haired kouhai.

“OW!!”

Clasping her cheek with both her hands, Risa slapped at the fingers which were squeezing at the flesh on her face.

“I meant pinch yourself, NOT ME!!”
Funny, but MAJOR continuity error.  Risa doesn't feel pain when her cheeks are pinched (as was established on the 2008.02.23 episode of HM@ ;D).

http://www.veoh.com/videos/v6402396eZzbYGGA



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Returning her angry stares with a sheepish grin, Sayumi replied cheekily.

“You claim you didn’t feel pain when others pinched your cheeks. So I thought why not.”

“Damn you Michishige.”
Oh BURN! XD
Maybe it doesn't hurt if Risa's ready for/expecting it. :P



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“Since you’re well enough to bully your sub-leader, I presume you’re fine. I’m leaving.”

Spinning around to pick up her cell phone and wallet from the dresser, Risa was about to exit the room when Sayumi called her back.

“Gaki-san! Stay with me?”

Her second sentence was significantly softer than the first and it almost sounded like a desperate plead for help. Stunned by the surprising request, Risa turned back.

...

“I know you’re hurt and I can understand your pain. But don’t harm yourself to release that frustration.”

...

She refused to admit her unrequited feelings for Eri and she hated herself for being so vulnerable. Nonetheless Sayumi couldn’t deny the pain that was numbing her heart and the tears that had began falling from her eyes.

“Rely on me Sayumin. Whenever you need a shoulder to cry on, I will be here.”
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...Risa's such a good and caring subleader!
:mon cute:


Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 3 (11/28)
Post by: lil_hamz on December 09, 2008, 11:46:03 AM
Ehhhhhhhhhhhhhh........... USO! USO! USO!!!

I never thought I would win Fic of the Month. All the other fics are awesome, much more so than mine :oops: Thank you everyone for voting for me. I'm so touched *sniff* To show my appreciation, I rushed out this chapter. I didn't have time to reply to the comments (I'll do that next time) but I've read them all and I'm really grateful for readers who reply. I'm thankful for lurkers who read my fics too so please give yourselves a nice big hug :heart: I apologise if this chapter wasn't that well written.

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Chapter 4
 
 
The melodious chirping of birds hopping on the window sill roused Sayumi as she waited for her vision to sharpen subsequent to opening her eyes. Stretching out lazily to loosen her tense muscles, she rolled over to lie flat on her stomach. The display of rainbow hues sprayed across the length of her room by the rotating sun catcher dangling at the balcony made Sayumi’s spirits soar.

“Isn’t it a beautiful day?”

Not getting a reply from the person who shared her queen-sized bed the previous night, the nineteen year old turned her head to the side only to be met with the scene of rumpled sheets strewn across the empty spot.
 
She left without saying goodbye.
 
Pouting slightly, Sayumi pushed herself off the comfy mattress with the intention of proceeding outside. When she reached her closed bedroom door, she noticed a small yellow post-it note stuck somewhere in the region not far from her eye level.
 
Baka, I didn’t leave without saying goodbye.
 
Tearing down the piece of stiff paper, she swung open the door to enter the spacious living room. A ceramic bowl was placed right in the middle of the wooden table in the adjoining dining hall. Upon closer inspection, Sayumi saw yet another golden sheet attached to the plate balanced carefully on top of the bowl. Flipping over the cover, a steaming bowl of scallop congee sprinkled with parsley bits was revealed.
 
Some congee would aid in your recuperation. I used dishwasher safe dishes just in case you ended up breaking more glassware >.<
 
I’ve informed the company that you’ll be taking today off to rest. Don’t dwell too much on things and take good care of yourself.
 
Bye bye,
Gaki-san

 
Reading the simple note over and over, a small smile crept onto Sayumi’s face. Sitting herself down on the dining chair which she had dragged out amid ear-piercing screeching, she spooned a dollop of lip smacking congee into her mouth and swallowed it satisfyingly. Every now and then, it felt good to be pampered. When was the last time someone babied her like this? That sensation seemed foreign as whenever she was around fellow Rokkies member Kamei Eri, the one on the receiving end of being indulged had always been Eri.

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Keeping Ai and Eri’s relationship a secret was becoming a thorny matter as the two openly displayed their affection for each other. Apparently the hand holding and tickling in private was no longer enough and soon the pair went on to take over the sole washroom on the entire level with their highly tantric activities.
 
“Not again.”
 
Reina’s complain wasn’t uncalled for as the common bathroom was once again locked from the inside. Rapid breathing and other debatable sounds could be heard through the thin door which made the young kitty cat very annoyed.
 
Behind her, Aika remained silent as she shook quietly in her shoes at feeling Reina’s bubbling rage. A ticked off Tanaka-san wasn’t one to be trifled with. As she had so unfortunately realized once while out on a movie date with the senpai.
 
“Wah…I never knew Kamei-san could be so… ”
 
Koharu’s high pitched mumble didn’t fail to escape the ears of those standing in the messy line. The assemble comprising of Reina, Koharu, Aika and the two pandas had been waiting outside for a substantial amount of time.

“Can I still be the turtle beside Kamei-san’s pond?”

Uttering her thoughts aloud somewhat forlornly, Jun Jun said to no one in particular. Standing behind her, Lin Lin nudged the elder discreetly. This wasn’t the time to be open about her colossal adoration towards Eri.

“OI AI-CHAN! ERI! Other people need to use the damn bathroom too!”

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Veering into the dressing room on the fourth floor with sharp cornering skills, Risa panted wearily from the effort she had exhausted while running from the ground floor. The elevator had taken an unusually long time to travel down from the topmost floor and she had given up on waiting since she didn’t have the luxury of time on her side. Having to make a trip home first after leaving Sayumi’s house to shower and grab the items she needed for today’s dance rehearsal, she barely had enough time to arrive at the company without being terribly late. Eri gets off the hook easily enough just by flashing an adorable grin, however Risa didn’t receive the same treatment as she had the image of a reliable and responsible sub-leader to uphold.

Expecting to be the only one in the room as it was almost time for dance practice, the young lady froze in her tracks underneath the wooden doorway when she caught a glimpse of two of her team mates who were inside. Ai and Eri were sharing one chair, or rather, Eri was sitting on Ai, who was in the chair. It was clear from Risa’s position at the entrance of the room that Ai was kissing Eri’s neck as the younger played with the fingers of the hands wrapped around her waist. Moaning contentedly each time Ai’s lips touched a sensitive spot, Eri stretched her hand backwards to try and reach Ai’s neck. The action caused Eri to tremble with significant force as she twisted her body on Ai’s lap.

Is Kame grinding?!??!

Gawking with her mouth hanging fully open, Risa’s brain suffered a mental breakdown at the illicit imagery played out right in front of her eyes. The “free show” for lack of a better term was abruptly ceased when Eri through half lidded eyes caught sight of Risa’s reflection in the mirror. Rapidly sliding off Ai’s lap with a self-conscious expression on her face, Eri acknowledged Risa’s presence.

“Gaki-san.”

“Ka-me….”

The awkward atmosphere was further escalated when Ai got up from the chair and approached Risa all the while not letting go of Eri’s hand which she had caught sometime during the course of the making out session. Precisely when, Risa didn’t know, and she wasn’t sure she really wanted to know.

“Ah Gaki-san, just the person I was looking for.”

Exchanging a glance with Eri whose cheeks were at present redder than the ripest tomatoes, Ai broached the topic which she had been pondering since morning.

“We have always been sharing a room on the concert tours. I was thinking it might be a nice change to swap rooms this time.”

“You want to room with Kame?”

Nodding back, Ai confirmed the answer to that question while Eri kept her eyes on the ground and shuffled her feet.

“We should get out of each other’s face for a bit you know. We don’t want nerves tested since we’re leader and sub-leader now.”

Just say you wanna suck face with Kame!

The unexpected angry thought that flashed across her mind shocked Risa. Guilt and shame engulfed her entire being as she mentally reprimanded herself for having such inappropriate views of her close friends.

You’re such a sore loser Niigaki Risa!

Though there was never a competition in the first place. On all accounts, Ai had never once considered Risa as anything more than a good friend.
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: Sukoshi on December 09, 2008, 12:44:28 PM
Ehhhhhhhhhhhhhh........... USO! USO! USO!!!

lol I thought that was Gaki at the start of the new chapter for a split second XD

awww Gaki's so sweet for leaving that note +1
awww Gaki made congee -1 (congee is Sukoshi's nemesis when she's sick)
Gaki keeping Sayu alive and making her morning all that much brighter +1 million

it's so funny imagining the girls lining up for the bathroom, even though it's probably happened a lot in real life...erm I mean...well not for the reason of course DX

Eri...Ai chan...Gaki.... *speechless* 
poor Gaki...she's earned herself 1 million points but is still on the losing end X__X

Ai chan  :pleeease:

total?

Gaki +1 million
Hammy +infinity

Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: KonaKaga on December 09, 2008, 12:48:17 PM
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*SayuGaki*

 :shy2:
Do I sense a new love??? :O

LOL Eveyone can't get into the bathroom to use it in it's appropriate way.  XD

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*Hot AiEri make-out scene*

 :drool:
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“Ah Gaki-san, just the person I was looking for. Would you like to join us?"
:w00t:

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“We have always been sharing a room on the concert tours. I was thinking it might be a nice change to swap rooms this time.”

“You want to room with Kame?”

Nodding back, Ai confirmed the answer to that question while Eri kept her eyes on the ground and shuffled her feet.

“We should get out of each other’s face for a bit you know. We don’t want nerves tested since we’re leader and sub-leader now.”

Just say you wanna suck face with Kame!


Tsk tsk tsk Ai-chan. Just admit that you want Eri in a nice, warm, bed. :twisted:
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on December 09, 2008, 03:12:49 PM
Aw...You updated while I was asleep. Well since jphip hate my iTouch (so much lag when I type) I officially reserve this post so that I can give you a proper review later. :p For now the easiest thing to type is GOOD JOB!! *hug*

EDIT: HAHAHAHA!!! HOME AT LAST!! Anyway, time for a proper review. Or comment. Then again, mine never make any sense... :sweatdrop:

...I think I spy a bit of GakiShige!! Gaki-san's such a nice person. :wub: And the AiEri was...whoa... :heart: Those two need to learn to hide away better. XD Seme Ai-chan~ I feel bad that Gaki-san saw them, though. D:

Oh, and favorite line of this chapter:
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“Can I still be the turtle beside Kamei-san’s pond?”
JUNJUUUN!!! XD Oh how I love that girl. :D *grins stupidly*
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: kRisZ on December 09, 2008, 03:47:34 PM
that was... hot. i need an ice cold drink

congratulations for winning  :muffin:
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: takagakifan on December 09, 2008, 09:02:07 PM
Yay an update!!!... In class so i have to make this short...

The posts-it where soo cute
Reina not being able to use the bathroom HAHAHA!!
AiEri Hawt-diggity-damn!
Gaki walking in on that... Awkward
Ending when she realizes that Ai never saw her and probably will never see her as anything more than a friend... so sad

P.S like 2 sec before I read this I was watching 6th gen observation day on crunchy roll... They were watching Morning Musume perform and Sayu said "i like Takahashi Ai-san but somehow i don't know why my eyes were fixated on Niigaki-san... she somehow stand out like a sudden burst" i wonder if there's someway to post it here....

If there is I'll edit this an add
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: ringo-hime on December 10, 2008, 09:33:50 AM
aaaaww.
Sayu and Gaki-san on the 1st part was cute <3
post its..  :lol:

omfg. AiEri hotness!  :D :P
now thats just osam.

wat much more better really omfg omg eff osamer is Gaki-san walking into them doing that!!  XD
torture.  :lol:  :rofl:

now i wanna see moar moar maor~   :otomerika:

congrats~  :P
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: stefy on December 10, 2008, 01:04:03 PM
Seriously? You didn't expect ta win? Why wouldn't ya win?!

WHoaaaaaa (*&)^&#^(^$%  :drool:
You make AiEri a friggin sizzling mind blowing HAWT COUPLE! But why are you so mean to Gaki?! Making her go through that?! Hammy.. your just EEEEEBIL!
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: JFC on December 10, 2008, 07:32:12 PM
Chapter 4

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*SAYU'S MORNING*
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww... Risa's taking care of her. :oops:



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Keeping Ai and Eri’s relationship a secret was becoming a thorny matter as the two openly displayed their affection for each other. Apparently the hand holding and tickling in private was no longer enough and soon the pair went on to take over the sole washroom on the entire level with their highly tantric activities.
Uh-oh.  If they're not careful they're going to get noticed.  :-X



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“Wah…I never knew Kamei-san could be so… ”
Ummmm........yeah. I don't think amyone knew.  :shocked:



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“Can I still be the turtle beside Kamei-san’s pond?”

Uttering her thoughts aloud somewhat forlornly, Jun Jun said to no one in particular. Standing behind her, Lin Lin nudged the elder discreetly. This wasn’t the time to be open about her colossal adoration towards Eri.
Oh jeez.
:dizzy:



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“OI AI-CHAN! ERI! Other people need to use the damn bathroom too!”
Okay, if they were trying to keep it a secret, THAT is not the thng you want to be doing.
:mon speechless:



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Having to make a trip home first after leaving Sayumi’s house to shower and grab the items she needed for today’s dance rehearsal, she barely had enough time to arrive at the company without being terribly late. Eri gets off the hook easily enough just by flashing an adorable grin, however Risa didn’t receive the same treatment as she had the image of a reliable and responsible sub-leader to uphold.
Risa does it so well though, which is why she's an awesome sub-leader. :rockon:



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Expecting to be the only one in the room as it was almost time for dance practice, the young lady froze in her tracks underneath the wooden doorway when she caught a glimpse of two of her team mates who were inside. Ai and Eri were sharing one chair, or rather, Eri was sitting on Ai, who was in the chair.
Wait a sec, you mean they're not in the bathroom? 
:stunned: 

Or did they just "pick up where they left off?" >_>



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The awkward atmosphere was further escalated when Ai got up from the chair and approached Risa all the while not letting go of Eri’s hand which she had caught sometime during the course of the making out session. Precisely when, Risa didn’t know, and she wasn’t sure she really wanted to know.

“Ah Gaki-san, just the person I was looking for.”
EHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH?????  :O



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“We have always been sharing a room on the concert tours. I was thinking it might be a nice change to swap rooms this time.”
Oh this is one HELL of a way for this convo to happen.
:on blackhole:



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“We should get out of each other’s face for a bit you know. We don’t want nerves tested since we’re leader and sub-leader now.”

Just say you wanna suck face with Kame!
It might be better if she indeed just comes out and states it. At least then there wouldn't be any false pretenses about it.

Still....poor Risa. :cry:



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The unexpected angry thought that flashed across her mind shocked Risa. Guilt and shame engulfed her entire being as she mentally reprimanded herself for having such inappropriate views of her close friends.

You’re such a sore loser Niigaki Risa!

Though there was never a competition in the first place. On all accounts, Ai had never once considered Risa as anything more than a good friend.
:pen_cry:
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: Fenrir on December 11, 2008, 05:57:01 AM
Ouch. That's a stab through the heart.

Poor Risa. :(
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: YumePouk on December 11, 2008, 09:46:41 AM
Risa, yo are so kind  :luvluv2:

Awww, Poo Risa.... I want to console her
but I feel a new love will be next?! SayuxGaki?!!!

I love so much this fanfic
Can't wait to read more ^^
Keep it up and Ganbatte ne
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: lil_hamz on December 16, 2008, 01:31:06 PM
Chapter 3

@Estrea: I just use every opportunity I get :D

@SBK: I love seeing how much you like Risa. *hugs* :wub:

@Lolli: LOL!!! I laughed like crazy at your little dialogue. I think I would seal whatever article it was Sayu touched and encase it under lasers and other security systems. Can Risa scheme? She seems so nice. I doubt she has an evil bone in her body. Though since this is a fic, I could make it happen :P

@writerjunkie: I wish I could update as quickly as you do. How do you do it? *in awe* :O

@SxY: You're asking about GakiShige too? But I can't decide which way to go. ARGH, decisions. :banghead:

@stefy: You can do it as well. Just write when you feel like you have nothing else to do :D

@Fenrir: If Ai did that things would get very interesting XD

@Sukoshi: *trumpets blast mighty mouse music* *Hammy swishes about* :P

@YumePouk: Thank you for liking and commenting :oops:

@takagakifan: You get hunger headaches? I get them a lot. I don't know anyone else who does so it feels kinda lonely when I do :( Are you still stressed out? I hope not. Can't wait to see you back in action!

@JFC: Being the evil Sayu she sometimes is, she didn't just pinch Risa's cheeks. She did the whole twisting while squishing thing. I have a feeling that would hurt especially when Risa ws taken unaware :lol:

 
Chapter 4

@Sukoshi: What does Sukoshi-chan feel like eating when she's sick? *prepares to write it down in notebook* Sukoshi + intrinity!! :heart: Uhhh is there such a word?

@KonaKaga: LOL!! Ai-chan asking Risa if she would like to join them :lol: That would make a nice spin-off story.

@SxY: Not true! All your comments make sense. And I like reading them :wub:

@kRisZ: Thank you *bows* Do you need a fan right in front of you too? *goes to drag one over* ;)

@takagakifan: I remember that clip :inlove: Do you think subconsciously Sayumi is attracted to Risa? Hmmmm *ponders*

@ringo-hime: I find myself going 'osam' recently. I think I got influenced by you :grin:

@stefy: I'm not ebil. I'm ebi. Oh gawd, why am I so lame? :doh:

@JFC: You're spoiling me with your incredible long comments :cow: I think I might cry if you stop doing them.

@Fenrir: Wanna console Risa in place of Ai? :twisted:

@YumePouk: Do you like GakiSayu? Thanks again for supporting this fic :)
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: lil_hamz on December 16, 2008, 04:00:16 PM
Chapter 5


Leaning her head back on the metal lockers, Risa closed her eyes. She was weary from the lack of rest and could very well fall asleep standing up. She had spent the previous night lying awake so she could check on the ill girl periodically and make sure her fever had indeed subsided. Slapping her face with her hands then shaking her head from side to side, Risa hyped herself up for another grueling session of dance practice. Opening her eyes, she was about to walk towards the exit of the empty dressing room when she noticed a figure standing at the doorway. Expecting it to be one of the members who had returned to pick up a forgotten item, she gasped in astonishment at realizing the new arrival was Sayumi.
 
"She already snatched her from me. Why does she have to take away what little time I have with Eririn?"
 
Tears glistened within her doe like eyes and Risa's gut felt like it was being twisted together at seeing Sayumi's devastated appearance. How could she console the younger? How could she alleviate her pain? Before she could decide on what to do, Sayumi took off like a speeding bullet down the hallway, dropping her duffel bag on the floor in the process.
 
"Sayumi!"
 
-----
 
The flight of steps leading up to the rooftop was long and winding. When she finally arrived at the summit, Risa was already gasping for air. Letting the door swing shut behind her with a loud bang, she looked around the unsheltered area for the whereabouts of the missing rabbit.
 
I'm getting old. Fancy feeling breathless after such a short sprint.
 
Searching from one end of the rooftop, Risa covered most of the flat concrete level before finding Sayumi standing at one corner near the railings. She was gazing out into the distance, a faraway look on her face. Going to stand behind her, Risa took a deep breath before asking.
 
"Are you alright?"
 
Putting one hand on her upper arm and squeezing it comfortingly, Risa remained silent. She figured Sayumi didn't need to hear any words at this moment. None of those were going to help in any way. Instead, letting her know someone was there to support her would be much more beneficial.
 
"I'm fine. I just need some time alone.'
 
Struggling to keep her voice even, Sayumi replied after sniffling a few times. Subsequently, she turned her head away from the elder to hide her embarrassment at having dried up tears streaked across her face. Nodding to show that she understood her desire for privacy, Risa stepped a few meters away.
 
"I'll be over there if you need me."
 
Pacing around anxiously as she waited for Sayumi to calm down, the scheduled dance rehearsal completely slipped Risa's mind. About twenty minutes later, Sayumi came up to where Risa was waiting, a forced smile plastered on her face.
 
"I'm good to go."
 
The two friends walked side by side in silence to the exit whilst Risa stole discreet glances at Sayumi. She wanted to make sure the wounded bunny was really okay. Upon reaching the exit which would lead them back down to the main building, Sayumi yanked hard on the handle of the heavy door and discovered to her dismal that it wouldn't budge. A look of bewilderment flashed across her delicate features and it took a while for her to make sense of what was happening. Spying the single orange colored brick lying beside the door, she exclaimed agitatedly.
 
"OMG you didn't put the stopper on!"
 
"Huh?"
 
Scratching the top of her head with her manicured fingernails, Risa answered, totally lost with the conversation.
 
"The door, it can only be opened from the inside so you have to stopper it with that brick!"
 
Throwing up her hands in frustration, Sayumi glared menacingly at the older girl with narrowed eyes.
 
"How was I supposed to know that? I've never been up here!"
 
Folding her arms across her chest, Sayumi didn't let up but continued grumbling about their current predicament.
 
"Just great, we're stuck here!"
 
Feeling somewhat guilt-ridden for landing them in such a state, Risa thought about how she could make amends.
 
"Maybe I can get the door to open."
 
Jogging backwards, she started running from a distance away and crashed shoulder first into the bulky door. Not only did she fail to burst open the structure successfully, the impact from the collision threw her back and left her sprawled out on the floor moaning in pain.
 
"Ow... I hope I didn't break something."
 
Wincing as she sat up slowly, Risa held onto her aching shoulder with her left hand, trying her best to not fall over without any assistance from the kouhai who kept grouching ceaselessly.
 
"You're so weak."
 
"Try smashing though your door last night and doing the same thing again now!"
 
Indignant at being blamed repeatedly, Risa shot back angrily, momentarily forgetting to be mindful of Sayumi's supposed fragile mental condition.
 
"So that was how you entered my house. I thought you found the hidden key."
 
Bending down to pull Risa up, Sayumi thought aloud. Noting the gray specks of dust that had gathered on her pants after falling onto the floor, the taller swatted lightly at the cotton material to clean her savior up.
 
"What key?"
 
"Everyone who has visited me at home more than once knows about it. If you had come over again after the last time you visited you would know about it too. Speaking of which, why haven't you dropped by since then? Did my sister rub you the wrong way?"
 
Helping Risa to the spot near the railings where she had stood originally, Sayumi eased Risa gently onto the floor before sitting down herself.
 
"Does it hurt a lot?"
 
Peeling carefully at Risa's shirt, Sayumi peered under the thin fabric to check on the rapidly forming bruise.
 
"It does look bad."
 
"It hurts like hell if you wanna know."
 
Taking her line of sight away from the laceration to look Risa in the eye, Sayumi muttered in a small voice.
 
"I'm sorry for causing you trouble. And ...thanks for everything you've done."
 
"Are you schizophonic?"
 
Blurting out the question before her brain reminded her against voicing the thoughtless comment, Risa enquired, referring to the rapid change in emotions Sayumi had displayed - grief, emptiness, annoyance and remorse. Promptly changing the subject to spare Sayumi further awkwardness after observing the reddish tint that appeared on her cheeks, Risa quipped.
 
"It might be a good thing we aren't the popular members. Imagine this getting out and tabloids reporting on Morning Musume members trapped on the roof."
 
The prospect of such a scenario sent the two young women into fits of hearty laughter. Their delight was cut short abruptly when a sudden gust of wind blew pass the topmost level of the towering skyscraper. Rubbing her hands up and down her arms to generate some greatly lacking warmth, Sayumi was pleasantly surprised to see a lime green jacket draped over herself.
 
"I may have weak shoulders, but I'm not the sickly one."
 
After ordering Sayumi to slip her arms into the sleeves of the garment, Risa helped the middle Rokkie secure the metal zip. Undoubtedly Risa was motherly and her actions touched Sayumi immensely though she would never admit it if asked. Still thinking about why she had never noticed all the good traits of her sub-leader, Sayumi felt a weight resting on her shoulder and the steady regulated breathing of her companion entered her ears. Cautiously tilting her head to not make large movements, Sayumi watched Risa sleep.
 
It's Ai-chan's loss for not treasuring you.

-----

 
Reina is such a genius.
 
Congratulating herself with a slanted smirk, Reina lighted the thin stick wedged between two of her fingers. She was only successful with her third effort as she fumbled a little with the silver lighter and had to shift her body accordingly to thwart the frosty winds repeatedly assaulting the weak flame. At last the tip of the cigarette blazed with an amber glow and Reina sucked in deep breathes of the silent killer. Observing the various shapes which she had mischievously puffed out into the cold winter air, Reina twirled her forefinger around, chasing after the mini clouds of smoke. During one of her escapades, she froze abruptly when from the corner of her wonky eye, she caught sight of a couple of foreign silhouettes.

Someone’s on the roof!
 
Frantically chucking the remaining stub onto the ground and stomping on it to exterminate the light, she flailed her hands wildly about in a feeble attempt to dissipate the unmistakable smell of nicotine. Whipping out a tube of extra strong spritz from her track pants pocket, she sprayed her mouth with an obscene amount of the chemical so the fragrant mist was coated on every millimeter of her jagged teeth.

Why didn’t I just flick the bloody thing off the roof?!

Reproaching herself for the foolish action which had surely brought more attention to her deed. Reina crouched shivering as she waited for the impending admonishment to arrive, the enraged mug of her manager appearing in her mind.

“You are a celebrity, AN IDOL, how could you indulge in such reckless behavior? Have you not considered the repercussions on the group as a whole??? Yada yada yada….”

Unexpectedly, the harsh scolding never materialized. Peeking through the cracks between her bony fingers, Reina squinted to recognize the unmoving pair seated on the ground some distance away. Deciding to advance towards the duo, Reina crept forward slowly.

“Sayu? Gaki-san? What are they doing together?”

Looking down at the sleeping twosome huddled snuggly together, Reina bent down to shake them awake.

Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/16)
Post by: Fenrir on December 17, 2008, 01:34:50 AM
Do I see Risa/Sayu love?? :O

But, awww, Risa's maternal instincts kicks in. Well, they did mention that Risa is like the mom and Ai is like the dad in MM. XD

Comment reply: Umm, I rather chase after Ai-chan. >.>  *runs away from Gaki fans*
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/16)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on December 17, 2008, 01:53:16 AM
Mama Risa!

...Oh wait. Maybe I shouldn't say that since we don't know how things will end up. xD But aww... Poor Sayu. Thank goodness Gaki-san is still there for her. <3
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/16)
Post by: JFC on December 17, 2008, 04:48:48 AM
Chapter 5

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Opening her eyes, she was about to walk towards the exit of the empty dressing room when she noticed a figure standing at the doorway. Expecting it to be one of the members who had returned to pick up a forgetten item, she gasped in astonishment at realizing the new arrival was Sayumi.
 
"She already snatched her from me. Why does she have to take away what little time I have with Eririn?"
 
Tears glistened within her doe like eyes and Risa's gut felt like it was being twisted together at seeing Sayumi's devastated appearance. How could she console the younger? How could she alleviate her pain? Before she could decide on what to do, Sayumi took off like a speeding bullet down the hallway, dropping her duffel bag on the floor in the process.
 
"Sayumi!"
Onoes!
:scared:



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Pacing around anxiously as she waited for Sayumi to calm down, the scheduled dance rehearsal completely slipped Risa's mind. About twenty minutes later, Sayumi came up to where Risa was waiting, a forced smile plastered on her face.
 
"I'm good to go."
They understand each other because they know that they're going through the same thing.
:pen_cry:



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The two friends walked side by side in silence to the exit whilst Risa stole discreet glances at Sayumi. She wanted to make sure the wounded bunny was really okay. Upon reaching the exit which would lead them back down to the main building, Sayumi yanked hard on the handle of the heavy door and discovered to her dismal that it wouldn't budge.
Uh-oh...don't tell me. :O



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Spying the single orange colored brick lying beside the door, she exclaimed agitatedly.
 
"OMG you didn't put the stopper on!"
 
"Huh?"
 
Scratching the top of her head with her manicured fingernails, Risa answered, totally lost with the conversation.
Sayu = :shock:
Risa = :dunno:



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"The door, it can only be opened from the inside so you have to stopper it with that brick!"
 
Throwing up her hands in frustration, Sayumi glared menacingly at the older girl with narrowed eyes.
 
"How was I supposed to know that? I've never been up here!"
:doh:



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"Maybe I can get the door to open."
 
Jogging backwards, she started running from a distance away and crashed shoulder first into the bulky door. Not only did she fail to burst open the structure successfully, the impact from the collision threw her back and left her sprawled out on the floor moaning in pain.
 
...
 
"You're so weak."
 
"Try smashing though your door last night and doing the same thing again now!"
She busted open Sayu's door? :o



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I thought you found the hidden key.
Well, shouldn't it have been obvious as there should have been some damage on Sayu's door from when Risa shoulder-tackled it?

...

Wait, there was a key? :?



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"Everyone who has visited me at home more than once knows about it. If you had come over again after the last time you visited you would know about it too. Speaking of which, why haven't you dropped by since then? Did my sister rub you the wrong way?"
Eeps.  :-X



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"It might be a good thing we aren't the popular members. Imagine this getting out and tabloids reporting on Morning Musume members trapped on the roof."
Risa? Sayu? Not popular? UNPOSSIBLE!!!  :cow:



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The prospect of such a scenario sent the two young woman into fits of hearty laughter. Their delight was cut short abruptly when a sudden gust of wind blew pass the topmost level of the towering skyscraper. Rubbing her hands up and down her arms to generate some greatly lacking warmth, Sayumi was pleasantly surprised to see a lime green jacket draped over herself.
 
"I may have weak shoulders, but I'm not the sickly one."
 
After ordering Sayumi to slip her arms into the sleeves of the garment, Risa helped the middle Rokkie secure the metal zip. Undoubtedly Risa was motherly and her actions touched Sayumi immensely though she would never admit it if asked.
See, it's shit like this that make Risa such an awesome subleader. Plus is just so "AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!" :wub:



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Sayumi watched Risa sleep.
 
It's Ai-chan's lost for not treasuring you.
"Loss", it's Aichan's "loss" for not treasuring her.

And damn right. :yep:



EDIT DUE TO STUFF ADDED TO CHAPTER-

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Congratulating herself with a slanted smirk, Reina lighted the thin stick wedged between two of her fingers. She was only successful with her third effort as she fumbled a little with the silver lighter and had to shift her body accordingly to thwart the frosty winds repeatedly assaulting the weak flame. At last the tip of the cigarette blazed with an amber glow and Reina sucked in deep breathes of the silent killer.
BAD REINA! BAD, BAD, BAD REINA!  :angry:



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During one of her escapades, she froze abruptly when from the corner of her wonky eye, she caught sight of a couple of foreign silhouettes.

Someone’s on the roof!
 
...

Peeking through the cracks between her bony fingers, Reina squinted to recognize the unmoving pair seated on the ground some distance away. Deciding to advance towards the duo, Reina crept forward slowly.

“Sayu? Gaki-san? What are they doing together?”

Looking down at the sleeping twosome huddled snuggly together, Reina bent down to shake them awake.
I guess Reina was already up there when Sayu and Risa came up? Strange that she wouldn't have noticed/heard the door open and close, not to mention the convo and impending panic when the other 2 realized they were "stuck" up there.

Now if it was reversed, and Reina was the one to come up after the other 2, how could she have missed seeing them? Considering that they would have wanted to be noticed, they would have stayed right by the door in case someone happened to pass by. To walk away from it when they're trying to get back inside wouldn't make sense, and while we know they can have airheaded moments, neither of them could have been THAT stupid to suggest otherwise.
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 4 (12/9)
Post by: Sukoshi on December 17, 2008, 11:54:41 AM
@Sukoshi: What does Sukoshi-chan feel like eating when she's sick? *prepares to write it down in notebook* Sukoshi + intrinity!! :heart: Uhhh is there such a word?

ah the answer to that might make you go  :O
The answer would be, Sukoshi's favourite food,  french fries.  (I've always had the philosophy that if you are already feeling miserable why add to the misery by eating something you don't like XD)
naturally mom would make me congee but when I'm a little better someone will make me fries and that instantly makes me feel ten times better =D

-----------------------------

whew...Sayu's just standing on the roof *wipes sweat off*

lol @ the stopper...I wonder if they'll still be up there 3 chapters later XD  I hope they have cellphones...but I want Eri to earn some points back by knowing where to find Sayu.

ouch.  Risa calls Sayu schizophonic followed by unpopular but it's a good thing she has that motherly princely charm that works soo well.

oh no!  I'm falling for SayuGaki!  This can't be good...since the title is Merry Go Round...I'm afraid the couples are going to switch in the end!  but...wait...don't I want Kameshige?  ahhhh I don't know anymore :frustrated:





Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/16)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on December 18, 2008, 04:25:14 AM
May I confuse us all further by posting this? It's a perf of YAH! Aishitai from the Odore Morning Curry concert... (Watch it in HQ.) And watch carefully at the times indicated:

youtube.com/watch?v=6o-5AG5EL6c

@1:04 KameShige
@2:10 TakaGaki

And quite unexpectedly...

@2:57 AiEri. (Damn hot, too. o-o Then again, so are the other two moments, lol.)

So have I furthered the confusion? *whistles innocently*
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/16)
Post by: JFC on December 18, 2008, 04:50:43 AM
^
Ummm...you might want to double-check that link. o_o
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/16)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on December 18, 2008, 05:07:04 AM
Wow, my post got fudged up somehow. o-o;; Well since I couldn't link it, I posted part of the link. Remember to watch HQ. ;) Thanks for letting me know.
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/16)
Post by: ringo-hime on December 19, 2008, 03:27:54 AM
OHYA!  :P

GakiShige~... :wub:
hehe.. thats so cute~ :wub:

just stay OSAM !!  XD
but yea.. this chap was SOSAM. :D

cnt wait~ meheh.
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/16)
Post by: lil_hamz on December 19, 2008, 01:01:24 PM
Due to unforeseen circumstances, chapter 5 was posted with the last past missing :P Please go back and read it again or the next chapter would seem somewhat disjointed. Thanks!
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: Sukoshi on December 19, 2008, 01:39:19 PM
For a second I thought Reina was a genius for locking the two of them up there...but then the brick became a stick...so there goes that theory

but Reina!  :on thumbb:
oh no!  Hammy!  she needs a pairing quick!  someone to make her kick the habit!   :hehehe:
smoking bad, shaking good  :hiakhiakhiak:



Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on December 19, 2008, 07:30:07 PM
Egads, I never saw that coming! :O Smoking is bad, Reina... :( Someone needs to help her get out of the habit. *wink*

...But I can't help but wonder... Just what is Reina a genius for? o_o
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: ringo-hime on December 20, 2008, 11:09:26 AM
hahaha.
dang. smoking Reina!  XD
just swear she's got a zippo!(and tons of them :twisted:)  :lol:

hahaha. :D
ok that small update made this SOSAMErrrrr  :wub:
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: chibilolli on December 20, 2008, 04:52:44 PM
OMG! I didn't comment on your last chapter!!! How the hell did that happen? Ahh well...I'm too lazy to go back and do it now so I'll move on to chapter 5 :P

Risa x Sayu...Risa x Sayu...Risa x Sayu. Maybe if I keep saying that over and over in my head I'll end up being more accustomed to the pairing. Either that or I'll get so pissed off that I never want to hear their names again. Hmm...maybe I won't tempt fate.

Reina is naughty naughty for smoking. Really disgusting habit and she should kick it right away. Though I can see her smoking in real life so meh. I've gone off the girl in any case so make her die of lung cancer for all I care  :lol:

So are you hinting at a Risa x Sayu pairing, or are you playing mind games with us? I think that Risa and Sayu will get together, then Ai and/or Eri will realise they miss their best friend and that maybe they had bigger feelings for them. Then they'll split up and get together with the other, and will compare the two for the rest of their lives. It will be like sloppy seconds. Even though I would like it to be TakaGaki and KameShige, I think that it should probably stay like it is.

Grrr...I'm waffling. I should shower!

*goes to shower*
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: ringo-hime on December 20, 2008, 05:57:28 PM
nOOO.
let AiEri stay as it is..  :cry: haha. i mean if you are planning on wat Lolli just stated.  :D
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: chibilolli on December 20, 2008, 07:44:39 PM
Ahh ringo-hime don't listen to me, I'm just waffling random crap! Although I wish I could get some inside facts about this story from Hammy. I wonder if I could persuade her somehow...
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: ringo-hime on December 20, 2008, 08:31:56 PM
do persuade her..nyahahakhak : D

getting inside facts are SOSAM. :]]
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: strawb3rrykream on December 22, 2008, 03:42:04 AM
Chapter 4:
I think it's hilarious how Gaki can already predict what Sayu's thinking. XD Now that I think about it, Eri's always the one being babied in that relationship and Sayu's always the caretaker. Must suck sometimes. Gosh, AiEri are so..... :drool: To the other members, no offense, but you're probably gonna have to get used to all the waiting and noises and.... :P Sexy practice room scene= :twisted: KAME IS GRINDING!!!! XD I can't blame Gaki at all for her feelings. I mean, she's most often paired with Ai-chan or Kame and them being together is like :shocked:

Chapter 5:
Awww, now this is depressing. Oshit, don't do it, Sayu!!! :cry: *breaths sigh of relief* She didn't do it. I is ok now. Pshh, they're locked out now. :lol: Owie, what the heck is Gaki tryna do?! :P I'm pretty sure she's not strong enough. Kinda saddish how Gaki and Sayu really don't do much together, except for recently b/c of certain events. I'm glad they are being all nakayoshi now though. *coughs* prince gaki *coughs* :P
*rolls eyes* No, Reina, smoking doesn't make you smart/cool etc. Love her freaking out though. XD AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW~~~~ KYAAAAAAAAAAA~ They fell asleep together!!! :wub:
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: lil_hamz on December 31, 2008, 08:04:16 PM
My last update on one of my fics was on Xmas eve. Now this chapter is posted on New Year's eve. Don't I bring nice presents at important holidays? :grin: Enough with my lame jokes and onto the story...


Chapter 6
 
 
So much for being a genius.
 
Grumbling to herself at the intrusion of the site once thought to be unknown to all, Reina wondered which other location was suitable to sneak a stick or two the next time she needed to satisfy her addiction. Training under Takahashi Ai aka the current leader wasn't the easiest thing in the world. This was especially true when the most competent member of the group had an assistant in the form of Kamei Eri. Trained in both ballet and jazz, the turtle was no slacker when it came to keeping an eye on the members' dance progress.
 
Should I try the wardrobe room instead? Nah, what if the outfits start to stink? I'll be a goner if the staff traced the smoke source.
 
Passing by the janitor's closet, her eyes lit up briefly at the possibility of using the disused cupboard. So engrossed in her own train of thoughts, Reina didn't realize she was already outside the dance studio. Yanking open the entrance, she stood with her back leaning against the door, at the same time holding it ajar for the two freshly rescued girls.
 
"Reina! Were you outside for long?"
 
"Kinda."
 
Concealing one hand behind her back, Reina crossed her fingers and prayed that Ai wasn't going to tell her off for exceeding the allocated break time. Or worse, she hoped the inflexible leader hadn't found out about her little 'habit' from the faint tobacco stench her attire still reeked of.
 
"Did you see Gaki-san?"
 
*Whew.*
 
Wiping her other arm across her forehead to soak up the beads of perspiration that had gathered during those tense moments, Reina heaved a guilty sigh of relief.
 
"Gaki-san was sleeping..."
 
Before she could give her reply in full, Risa and Sayumi strolled in one after another into the practice room which was at last occupied by all nine members.
 
"GAKI-SAN!"
 
Ai's shrill voice penetrated the air and everyone stopped their activities to turn their attention on the speaker. The oldest’s tone was evidently laced with mammoth annoyance.
 
"I gave you ten minutes grace seeing how flustered you were when you arrived. More than an hour had passed since then."
 
Jerking her head up to gaze at the clock hanging on the wall, Risa gasped aloud when she noted the time.
 
"I didn't realize it was so late, I was with Sa..."
 
Interrupting her words crudely, Ai stepped forward with a deep frown on her youthful face.
 
"You were sleeping! How could you when everyone else was hard at work practicing?"
 
Nobody other than Risa managed to detect the disappointment underlying her words. Feeling immensely remorseful for betraying Ai's trust, Risa accepted the chiding without any grievances. As sub-leader, her tardiness and lack of discipline was intolerable.
 
"I'm sorry Ai-chan. I'm so sorry everyone. It's my fault that practice couldn't go on as planned."
 
Turning to face the other members, Risa bowed sincerely as she apologized for holding up the practice session. The remaining members scrambled to assure Risa that they didn't mind the unforeseen interruption and there was no need to seek their forgiveness in such a grave manner. To show her support, Eri even went over to hug her ex-radio partner. Everyone thought that the matter had been resolved and the interrupted dance session could resume. However, Ai was extraordinarily obstinate regarding the issue of punctuality. She could overlook many things but lateness wasn't one of them.
 
"You will stay back to clean up after rehearsal."
 
Sharp intakes of breath could be heard from the flabbergasted members as they tried to comprehend Ai's instruction. Did she just order Risa to stay behind following a lengthy practice session to mop the floors and clean the dusty stereo systems in addition to rearranging the stacks of CDs and other random objects strewn about the room?
 
"Ai-chan..."
 
Trying to intervene, Eri begged Ai to reconsider her decision. There had never been a punishment relating to promptness being handed out prior to this one. If there had been such a regulation, Eri and more recently Jun Jun would have been slapped with it on numerous occasions.
 
"I don't think it's harsh."
 
Almost spitting out her reply, Ai didn't glance at the Rokkie but continued glaring hard at her best friend.
 
"I understand. I'll make sure everything is in order before I leave."
 
Sayumi had been quietly watching the on goings and couldn't understand why Risa didn't explain herself. If she did Ai wouldn't have any reason to punish her. Even if the leader was determined to melt out some form of penalty, at least she would be able to accompany her and share the workload. Believing that Risa was being unfairly treated, Sayumi seethed with an unspoken rage. She was barely able to contain her resentment at the obvious injustice when Ai chose this unfortunate instant to utter another quip.
 
"I expected better from you Gaki-san."
 
That sentence was what broke the camel's back and out of the blue, Sayumi flared up like a powerful volcano which had been dormant for years.
 
"You don't know anything! You never even bothered to find out the real cause for Gaki-san's absence. None of this was her fault!"
 
Halting her livid rant to pause for breath, Sayumi shifted her fury from Ai to Eri who was now standing beside her girlfriend.
 
"Perhaps if you got out of each other's faces long enough, you would ask about my illness or question why I appeared for practice on my day off!"
 
At this juncture, the studio was so silent you could hear a pin drop. None of the kouhais dared to move an inch let alone attempt to calm the various parties down. Making eye contact with Reina, Aika signaled for her relatively close friend and team mate to do something. The reply to her plead was simply Reina shaking her head discreetly and mouthing the words, No way I'm sticking my neck out.
 
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@Fenrir: Motherly Risa = :heart: Oh so you prefer Ai-chan eh. Well she is lovable in so many ways. Since it’s such a tough choice I shall not throw any eggs your way :P Just kidding :P

@JFC: Thanks for pointing out my spelling mistake. Spelling was never one of my strong points XD As always, I love reading your comment. It definitely made me smile :) About your queries, Reina went to the roof top after the bunny + bean duo. Sayumi led Risa to sit where she was standing earlier (against the railing) and that spot wasn’t very visible from the door (where Reina was smoking). The 2 didn’t stay by the door as they didn’t expect to fall asleep. If they were awake they would have been able to realize if someone came up. Hope that answers your question.

@Sukoshi: French fries when you’re sick? That sounds like someone I know :D Nope no cellphones. If you recall, Sayu dropped her bag and Risa stuffed hers into the locker along with her other processions as she was about to head for dance practice. Golly you’re right! How could Risa criticize Sayu this way? :lol: I still don’t know who I’m gonna pair Reina up with if anyone at all. Any suggestions?

@Shii-chan: You mentioned you like being referred to by this name right? About the Reina is a genius bit, it's because she thought she was smart to have found a good place to smoke. Too bad GakiShige stumbled onto that hideout unknowingly :D There was a Ai x Eri moment in that concert? I don’t remember seeing it. Gotta find some time to check it out again ;)

@ringo-hime: And you’re OSAM! I’m assuming that has a good meaning to it since it’s not used where I come from :P I was thinking of zippo too! XD

@Lolli: So I take that you don’t smoke? Good for you cuz I don’t either. I can’t stand that smell at all. I ain’t telling :P You'll have to read (and comment) to find out. Oh btw, it’s gonna be New Years tomorrow. I wonder if you are gonna be able to keep ya email promise :lol:

@SBK: :shocked: You're back! :muffin: Where did you disappear too?!?! *hugs* I missed seeing you around *pouts* I see that you have updated your fics. Hopefully I can read and comment before I get offline *crosses fingers*



 
 
 
 

Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 6 (12/31)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on December 31, 2008, 11:31:08 PM
Aww, thanks for missing me~ *cuddles Hammy* I was having internet issues but that's all resolved~ :heart:

Haha, Reina!! Never fails to make me laugh.
O....M....F....G..... :shocked: Nee, Hammy....*pulls on Hammy's pantleg* Ai-chan's scaring me. :mon curtain: For once, I'm glad I'm not in Momusu if she's gonna be like that. :mon yell: As intimidated as I feel, I'm also like Sayu, just a tad annoyed. Where did the Ai-chan who actually cares about ppl go? HUH? HUH? HUH???

I like calling you Hammy now, obviously. XD
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 6 (12/31)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on January 01, 2009, 01:28:43 AM
*stares gaping at the chapter* Ho. Ly. Shit. *cowers on floor* WHAT DID YOU DO TO AI-CHAN?!?! ;~;

At this point, I feel really bad for Sayu and Gaki-san. :( But...

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"Ai-chan..."
 
Trying to intervene, Eri begged Ai to reconsider her decision.

Eri isn't letting this go unnoticed. I kind of imagined Eri breaking the silence and grabbing onto either Sayu's or Gaki-san's to take them out of the room and talk. But that's just my brain working. I really hope Eri does try to do something - she can't simply be oblivious to all of this. :(

...And I made no comments on Reina yet. Then again, I don't have much to say about her just yet. She still seems pretty conserved. I wonder if she'll kick her habit by the end, though...

*looks up* OH MY GOD HAMMY. I MADE A REASONABLE COMMENT. IT'S A MIRACLE!!!
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 6 (12/31)
Post by: JFC on January 01, 2009, 01:57:10 AM
Chapter 6

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Grumbling to herself at the intrusion of the site once thought to be unknown to all, Reina wondered which other location was suitable to sneak a stick or two the next time she needed to satisfy her addiction. Training under Takahashi Ai aka the current leader wasn't the easiest thing in the world.
Hmmmmm...makes me wonder now about just how long Reina's been a puffer, and how she's been able to keep it a secret for this long. O_o



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"Did you see Gaki-san?"
 
*Whew.*
 
Wiping her other arm across her forehead to soak up the beads of perspiration that had gathered during those tense moments, Reina heaved a guilty sigh of relief.
 
"Gaki-san was sleeping..."
Uh-oh, this can't lead to anything good. :o



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*AICHAN SCOLDS RISA*
While it's understandable why Aichan had to do that in her capacity as leader, on a personal level, it still stings.
:mon curtain:



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"I expected better from you Gaki-san."
 
That sentence was what broke the camel's back and out of the blue, Sayumi flared up like a powerful volcano which had been dormant for years.

*SAYU SNAPS*
HOLY CRAP!

Part of me wants to go "GO SAYU!" for standing up for Risa like that, but considering what she's facing, it's still :mon scare:



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At this juncture, the studio was so silent you could hear a pin drop. None of the kouhais dared to move an inch let alone attempt to calm the various parties down. Making eye contact with Reina, Aika signaled for her relatively close friend and team mate to do something. The reply to her plead was simply Reina shaking her head discreetly and mouthing the words, No way I'm sticking my neck out.
I'm with Reina on this one. Risk receiving some of Aichan's wrath as well? I don't think so.



/me looks for an umbrella, raincoat, and some anti-stink spray for when the next chapter arises (and the shit hits the fan).
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 5 (12/19) Correction Made
Post by: chibilolli on January 01, 2009, 03:34:47 AM
@Lolli: So I take that you don’t smoke? Good for you cuz I don’t either. I can’t stand that smell at all. I ain’t telling :P You'll have to read (and comment) to find out. Oh btw, it’s gonna be New Years tomorrow. I wonder if you are gonna be able to keep ya email promise :lol:
If I'm not mistaken, I held that promise...just! No, I don't smoke and I don't like it when people who have just been smoking stand next to me. Makes me feel sick :thumbdown:

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OMFG! WTF AI? GTFO!

bitch!

That's just downright nasty. I don't like her no more...kill her off!!!

I don't know...I'm all confused as to what I think could happen. So much so that I'm not even going to speculate. Any chance you can give me a little 'heads up' in your e-mail reply? I forgot to ask it in there :D
Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 6 (12/31)
Post by: Sukoshi on January 01, 2009, 10:17:43 AM
MOU!  AI CHAN!  hidoi yo~!!

*crosses arms*

you can't have it both ways Ai chan!  she should be super mellow and happy with Eri but instead she turned into an evil Gaki dictator!   horrible XD  the way she was treating Gaki was so unfair...it irked me a little!   thank god for Sayu!  She was cool at the end!   *clasps*


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I still don’t know who I’m gonna pair Reina up with if anyone at all. Any suggestions?

Ah...no suggestions.  I just said Reina needs a pairing since I think it's the perfect fix for everything XD  but seeing as only the younglings are left...it would make me feel icky XD  It's probably more interesting if not everyone is paired up anyways.  ah...maybe Sayu's yelling (and I hope there's more of that in the next chapter cause that was awesome) will make Ai chan wake up and see what's really happening around her.  Stop being mean to Gaki and go help Reina, Ai chan!


Happy New Year
*hugs Hammy* thank you for all the holiday treats =D

Title: Re: Fic of the Month // Merry Go Round - Chapter 6 (12/31)
Post by: ringo-hime on January 01, 2009, 08:05:09 PM
aaaaaahhhhh!

lol Reina XD . ZIPPO FUN! :D tricks!tricks! >____<;

oh...Ai-chan is such a meanie!!

bitch fit much? hahah HUZZUH to her.

OHHHHHH. EXPLODING SAYUMIN! ohboi!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 6 (12/31)
Post by: lil_hamz on May 08, 2009, 06:52:12 AM
I wanted to update this fic. It has been too long. I hope readers still want to read this :oops:


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Merry Go Round
Chapter 7

Standing by herself in front of the wall of full-length mirrors, Ai gazed at her reflection broodingly. Who exactly was the woman staring back at her from the reflective surface? It wasn’t her character to blow up at Gaki-san like that. Or for that matter admonish anyone so severely.

Sinking to her knees, Ai dropped her head low and closed her eyes. Recalling the earlier events in the hazy window which had opened up in her mind’s eye, she saw Reina enter the dance studio followed by Risa and Sayumi. Clad snugly over the bunny was Risa’s jacket. The bright green garment was an item they had picked out together and Ai had a similar piece in pink.

What is wrong with me?

Digging her fingernails into her palm, it suddenly dawned on Ai the reason for her unpleasantness. Sayumi wearing Risa’s jacket. Yes, that was it. Somehow when she saw the lime green Adidas jacket worn by a person other than herself, a bizarre annoyance sparked up within her. Perhaps if she hadn’t noticed that little detail, Ai wouldn’t have flared up the way she did.

Although she now knew the cause for her annoyance, Ai wasn’t sure why she reacted so callously. The fifth and sixth genners were only sharing clothes. It wasn’t a big deal. In fact, leader and sub-leader did it all the time. Becoming increasingly confused, Ai uttered a strangled cry, venting her frustrations at how a regular dance rehearsal could have gone so wrong.

“Ai-chan! Are you alright?”

Snapping her head up and meeting Eri’s anxious gaze, Ai flushed embarrassedly. She didn’t want anyone to see her strange method of relieving stress, especially not Eri, the person she was dating.

“What are you doing here? Didn’t I tell you to go home?”

Seeing that the rest of the members were in no frame of mind to continue with the remaining dance session, Ai had released them early after Sayumi stormed off dragging Risa with her.

“Being concerned. Let me stay and accompany you?”

Sighing exasperatedly at Eri for turning back to find her, Ai replied.

“Can’t you understand that I need to be alone?”

Shocked by how bothered Ai sounded, Eri bit hard on her lower lip. It was evident she was deeply saddened by Ai’s outburst. Getting up slowly from kneeling beside her girlfriend, Eri squeaked softly.

“Rest well. And, erm... see you tomorrow.”

“ERI! I didn’t mean...”

Feeling tremendously apologetic for yelling at her, Ai shouted for Eri to stop. However, the wounded turtle didn’t reduce her speed and the studio was left silent subsequent to the door slamming shut with her departure. Thumping her clench fist against the polished wood floor, Ai blamed herself for her insensitivity towards someone as vulnerable as Eri.

“I didn’t mean to hurt you. Why can’t you be like Gaki-san? She knows when to let me be.”

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~Flashback~

“Sayumin, I don’t think it’s a good idea to leave.”

Struggling to wrench her wrist free from Sayumi’s grasp, Risa tried to reason with the bunny. Abandoning practice in addition to leaving after the heated exchange with Ai was hardly befitting on them as members of Morning Musume. It would be difficult for Ai to present herself as an authoritative leader in future.

“Gaki-san, this situation with Ai-chan can‘t continue. You‘re practically like a little puppy running circles around her. From this day forth, both you and I are going to live for ourselves.”

~End of flashback~

The puddles of water accumulated on the ground seeped into her shoes and emitted a soft squishing sound with each step that she took. Balancing the handle of an umbrella with a transparent cover on her shoulder, the twenty year old walked slowly. Her line of sight was focused on the far end of the road but she wasn't paying attention to anything in her path. Taking leisurely strolls was an activity she indulged in whenever she could afford the time and it was a good method to clear her mind and relieve stress when Disneyland wasn’t an option.

Maybe Sayumin is right. I have to stop thinking about Ai-chan. She’s with someone else now.

 

~Risa's Point of View~

It's raining again and somehow, the rain reminds me of you.

I place my hand over my coat pocket, feeling the small budge inside. Should I call you? I want to but I'm afraid. What do I say when I hear your voice?

A group of chattering schoolgirls brush past me, lamenting about not getting enough rest. Preparations for the upcoming university exams have put a strain on their exhausted bodies.

I see myself in them as I study their tired faces. I have not been sleeping well ever since you and Kame started dating.

I lie awake every night listening to the patter of rain. I wonder what you are doing and whether Kame is by your side.

Are you happy?

It seems that all I have left these days is silence. It has replaced you as my company.

I'm getting weary, tired of being alone. Is there someone else like me? Who is unfruitful in waiting for that special someone?

I had wished for love but falling for you has taught me nothing except the taste of loneliness.

The ending cannot be more obvious. It is clear that even without me, it wouldn't make a difference.

You don't need me, you never did.

How would you react if you knew about my affections for you? If your reply is to apologize, then I don't want to hear it.

Because the one who is loved doesn't need to be sorry.

~End of POV~

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Four hours had passed from the time an irate Sayumi pulled Risa with her out of the studio. And it had been just as many hours since Reina tried calling her senpai on her cell phone to no avail. Immensely worried when she couldn't contact her, Reina decided to pay her a visit to ensure she was fine despite the massive thunder storm brewing in the distance.

"Tanakacchi, what are you doing here?"

Searching within her purse for the house keys, Risa asked the drenched figure standing outside her home. Reina had been staring at her feet until she heard Risa’s voice. Lifting her eyes to the taller girl’s face, she explained.

"I couldn't get you on the phone. I wanted to apologize. It was my fault that you got into trouble with Ai-chan."

Shaking her head from side to side, Risa assured the younger that she wasn’t to blame. Leading the way into her house, she motioned for Reina to take a seat on the couch whilst she rushed to get her a towel.

When Risa got back, she found Reina with her hands wrapped around her body. The petite girl was shivering and her teeth clattered in spite of her chewing on her lip. Draping the thick material over her shoulders, Risa steered her kouhai towards the bathroom and ushered her inside.

"Take a hot shower, I'll get you a change of clothes."

When Reina reemerged, Risa was waiting for her with a warm mug of delicious cocoa.

"You look cuter than I do in that outfit."

Complaining with mock annoyance, Risa grinned when Reina chuckled gleefully at her joke.

"I can't help being cute. It's just the way I am."

"Am I sensing a revival of Sayumin’s famous line? But I have to admit Tanakacchi IS really cute."

Observing that Reina hadn't combed her hair, Risa ran her fingers through the long copper tresses, untangling the knots within. So absorbed in taming the unruly strands, she didn't notice Reina’s subtle gawking. A faint crimson blush colored her cheeks and her breathing sped up.

Why does your world consist of only Ai-chan? Can’t you see that I’m love with you?


 
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on May 08, 2009, 08:47:30 AM
OH HOLY CRAP. *stares in shock at that last line* O____O Now I see why it's REALLY called Merry Go Round...

Ai --(?)--> Eri
Ai --(?)--> Risa
Eri --♥-->Ai
Risa --♥--> Ai
Sayu --♥--> Eri
Reina --♥--> Risa

@_@
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: Sukoshi on May 08, 2009, 12:48:20 PM
Ooo it's Merry Go Round~!  I miss the twists and turns that this story brings =D

I see Ai chan hasn't changed much since last time  :depressed:  Still a meanie!  *hmph*
Instead of yelling at Gaki...she's yelling at Eri.  *shakes head*  How can anyone yell at Eri?!   :grr:

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Balancing the handle of an umbrella with a transparent cover on her shoulder, the twenty year old walked slowly. Her line of sight was focused on the far end of the road but she wasn't paying attention to anything in her path.

I'm not going to say it! *quietly grumbles about almost having a panic attack over nothing*    :ph43r:

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Taking leisurely strolls was an activity she indulged in whenever she could afford the time and it was a good method to clear her mind and relieve stress when Disneyland wasn’t an option.

That's some crazy 4 hour leisurely stroll!  :sweat:  I secretly believe she walked all the way home by foot!  Like Yokohama home! XD

lol at the last part

so you found her a pairing after all!  and what a pairing!  The Reina in my head reacted with "I'm in love with who?!"  XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: Kuji on May 08, 2009, 12:52:14 PM
EHHH? Whutta? I just read this from the beginning and I LUBS it.

On Ai. What exactly are her feelings? First she has this whole, 'don't fall in love with your best friend' deal so she gets together with Eri but then she gets annoyed at Eri for not understanding when to let her be like a best friend would. Srsly, she needs to sort things out. Her reaction to seeing Sayu wearing the jacket makes me want to dump Risa's wardrobe on Sayu... and maybe a few pieces on Reina for good measure. Also, she really needs to be more discreet when it comes to the PDA with Eri. No matter if it's your best friend that you don't know is in love with you or just other members, no one wants it rubbed in their faces (members of this forum being exceptions :P ).

On Eri. Oh poor girl, it's not her fault she doesn't understand Ai like Gaki-san does. That's just a near impossible task. We haven't seen her interact too much with Sayu so far in the story so I've got to wonder what that would  be like now. Will she ask Sayu's advice about her situation with Ai since they're besties? Ouch, that would be rubbing salt on an open wound for Sayumi. Since Ai is her first, this relationship is no small thing so I fear for the future emotional well-being of the turtle in this story. She could end up the most hurt out of everyone.

On Risa.  :wub: She's so awesome and princely and responsible and nice! As leader, Ai really should have been more aware of Sayu's illness but instead she while she was having 'fun time' with Eri, the sub-leader was the one that ended up caring for their groupmate. I'm glad Sayu noticed her good points and defended her when it counted. The things that Risa does just for other people, even people she isn't in love with (Sayu) just goes to show that she is honestly a saint. Of course, I have a personal bias, being a huge Risa fan but the congee? The comforting? The jacket? The door? Need I say more? Hm. Then again, no wonder Ai is conflicted because even if you did have a girlfriend, Risa really is enough to make you have second thoughts, isn't she? Especially when you start comparing traits as Ai is doing. :/ Each individual has their unique points, Ai. Risa's are just really irresistable is all.

On Reina. ...and the above on Risa is why I'm should not be surprised that she's in love with her.... YET I STILL AM! WHOA WHERE DID THAT COME FROM? And yes, Reina, she can't see you're in love with her even though you had such a good opportunity to show her when you could have stood up for her in front of Ai. Too bad you missed it by not wanting to stick your neck out. Now Sayu is probably going to make a move before you do. I think being cute helps though. ...although, if you're competing with the bunny... Good luck, Tanakacchi!

Anyway, lil_hamz, I'm a big fan of this story now. XD Please write more soon!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: KonaKaga on May 08, 2009, 01:04:16 PM
Reina's in love with Gaki-san!? :shocked
Man, this is getting messy XD
I'm so happy this story is back! I was waiting for some AiEri, but sadly it's not very happy atm :cry:


...... :shocked
Your stories never fail to impress!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: ringo-hime on May 08, 2009, 01:38:31 PM
YEABBA!!!Reina loves Gaki-san!! :twothumbs

But Ai hurt meh lovely Eri-chan~D:

you better write more cause you had a date with Ron!!!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: JFC on May 08, 2009, 08:03:12 PM
Merry Go Round
Chapter 7


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What is wrong with me?

Digging her fingernails into her palm, it suddenly dawned on Ai the reason for her unpleasantness. Sayumi wearing Risa’s jacket. Yes, that was it. Somehow when she saw the lime green Adidas jacket worn by a person other than herself, a bizarre annoyance sparked up within her. Perhaps if she hadn’t noticed that little detail, Ai wouldn’t have flared up the way she did.
Knowing the cause is one thing, , but right now the next question that Aichan needs to ask herself is...WHY did the fact that Sayu is wearing Risa's jacket set her off? she now has to figure out. :yep:



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Although she now knew the cause for her annoyance, Ai wasn’t sure why she reacted so callously. The fifth and sixth genners were only sharing clothes. It wasn’t a big deal. In fact, leader and sub-leader did it all the time. Becoming increasingly confused, Ai uttered a strangled cry, venting her frustrations at how a regular dance rehearsal could have gone so wrong.
We, of course, as the readers, already have a good idea as to why. :)



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*AICHAN SNAPS AT ERI*
:mon scare:



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“ERI! I didn’t mean...”

Feeling tremendously apologetic for yelling at her, Ai shouted for Eri to stop. However, the wounded turtle didn’t reduce her speed and the studio was left silent subsequent to the door slamming shut with her departure. Thumping her clench fist against the polished wood floor, Ai blamed herself for her insensitivity towards someone as vulnerable as Eri.

“I didn’t mean to hurt you. Why can’t you be like Gaki-san? She knows when to let me be.
Makes you think, doesn't it Aichan?



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*RISA'S POV*
:gmon tears:



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*REINA VISITS RISa*
Awwwwwwwww...:oops:



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Observing that Reina hadn't combed her hair, Risa ran her fingers through the long copper tresses, untangling the knots within. So absorbed in taming the unruly strands, she didn't notice Reina’s subtle gawking. A faint crimson blush colored her cheeks and her breathing sped up.
Eh? :?



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Why does your world consist of only Ai-chan? Can’t you see that I’m love with you?
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEH?!?!?!?!??!
:mon spit: :mon spit: :mon spit:


GakiReina?
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on May 09, 2009, 06:18:05 AM
YAY UPDATE!!! :twothumbs
As scary as Ai-chan was in the last chapter, I can't help but feel for the girl~ (I LOVE LOVE LOVE their matching jackets, btw :wub:) Now that she realizes her feelings, it's gotta be even harder to watch Gaki interact with everyone else. Can't believe the way she talked to Eri though. :( Ah, another reason why I think TakaGaki is so perfect. Mmm, Sayu's right~ It's not good to live for someone else and Gaki has the right to move on. She needs to care for herself first and foremost. OMG REINA!!! :grin: Gawd, I've been wanting a TanaGaki story SOOO badly! XD

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: writerjunkie on May 09, 2009, 04:36:39 PM
I was wondering when you would update this fic! and yay you did! I guess you are planning on not leaving any fics unfinished. I usually just give up on my stories. lol so much of the cute Ai/Eri which I like a lot! But now opens up a freakin love circle instead of a love triangle which is even worse! lol GakiShige? That's something still very new to me. I'm if-y on it since I like Risa with Ai and a little with Eri too. lol and i like Sayu with either Koharu or Eri. lol But I think you'll make it work and people will love the new pairing. lol keep on writing. :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: AuburnChicken on May 12, 2009, 11:42:50 PM
I'm liking this fic a lot. 

Ai-chan while confused is being selfish here, snapping at everyone who loves her and taking up more than her fair share of hearts.  She deserves to suffer is some sort of isolation for a while so she can reflect on what she's doing eh.  Have the girls abandon her for a week or so since she's being the dragon lady.  I hope they have enough sense to do that and give her some time and space to calm down.  There should be an apology forthcoming.

It's fascinating seeing how the girls compete with each other to win the heart of the girl they like and the emotional toll such competition takes.  Please keep up the great writing. 

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: lil_hamz on May 22, 2009, 09:10:41 AM
Chapter 6

@SBK: That poor monkey-wunky emoticon looks so terrified :D

@Shiichan: Eri's gonna try and fix things with Sayumi. Will it be too late? :cry:

@JFC: I think a golfing umbrella might make for better protection XD

@Lolli: LOL, kill Ai off? So early into the story? :lol:

@Sukoshi-chan: What's hidoi? Well it is a merrygoround so Reina has to like someone :P

@ringo-hime: When you said exploding Sayumi the image of her going off into tiny pieces flashed in my mind XD

Chapter 7

@Shiichan: Did I tell you I liked your little relationship chart? :)

@Sukoshi-chan: :lol: I agree no one can yell at Eri but then again, we're fans aren't we? You thought I was gonna pull a cab thingy didn't you? XD Maybe I shouldn't have used 4 hours. It does seem a little too lengthy? LOL at the 07 in your mind.

@Kuji:I like your avatar! The bunny is so cute in it :heart: Your comment gets the award for inducing the most smiles on a particular piece of ham. I have to say Sayu is cuter than Reina so the yankii would probably have to try other ways besides falunting her kawaii-ness to get subleader.

@KK: You'll get some elements of happy Ai x Eri in chapter 8 :)

@ringo-hime: No dating of Ron till Sunday evening I think. I'm gonna be out at sea. But I don't wanna go :(

@JFC: I surprised you with that last line didn't I? *guesses from 3 monkies spewing stuff from their mouths* XD

@SBK: Their matching jackets was all I could notice during the Cinderella rehearsals. That and gorgeous Risa in that low pony-tail of course :heart: Me too! I wanted to read some TanaGaki for the longest time. When you can't find it, write it :P

@Junkie: Don't worry about leaving fics unfinished, when the spark comes you'll start to it again :) I'm pretty slow with my updates as well.

@AuburnChicken: Awww thank you for liking, reading and commenting on this fic. I really appreciate it. I like how you put in words Ai's situation - she's taking up more than her fair share of hearts :cry:

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Chapter 8

“Sayu!”

Michishige Sayumi had just stepped in through the double glass sliding doors after swiping her access card in the device attached to the building wall when she heard a familiar voice calling her name. Turning her head in the direction of the sound, she saw a harried looking Eri literally springing from her seat in the lobby's lounge. Racing towards her, the older girl was at her side within three large steps.

“Ohayo.”

Forcing out a small smile, Sayumi greeted the person who had obviously been waiting for her before continuing towards the elevators. Sensing that her best friend in Morning Musume wasn't going to speak further, Eri took the initiative to start a conversation.

"Did you sleep well last night?"

"Um."

"I was going to text you but..."

Now inside the moving cubicle, Eri watched with furrowed brows at Sayumi who was jabbing at the elevator's button impatiently. It was evident from the younger woman's behavior that she was uncomfortable about sharing the same space as the turtle-like girl. Drawing a deep breath, Eri mentally prepared herself for any scolding or grouses that Sayumi might lash at her. Unexpectedly, the first person who spoke wasn't herself.

"I'm not mad you know."

"Really? That's great! I was so worried that you’re still upset. Why don't we visit DisneySea on Saturday? You mentioned wanting to go."

Remembering that she had agreed to accompany Sayumi to the popular attraction many times before but had to this day not fulfilled her promise, Eri suggested the idea so they could spend some time together. It was true that she had been neglecting Sayumi after getting together with Ai.

A soft ding was heard announcing the arrival of the lift at the designated level prior to the doors sliding open. With a soft tone, Sayumi uttered.

"I thought you would have made plans with Ai. I already asked someone else."

The doors came together again as a lone figure walked out leaving just one member of the pair behind. Without a new destination selected, the motor slowed to a halt and the lift grew silent.

“Sayu…”

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The usually noisy dressing room was so tranquil one could hear a pin drop. In fact, Risa could distinctively hear the low rhythmic ticking sound of the watch strapped on her wrist. Twisting her arm to check the analogue face for the twenty-seventh time that morning, she was getting increasingly restless. As someone who was always prompt for any appointment, she had habitually arrived for the day’s Platinum 9 Disco concert dance rehearsal 30 minutes early.

She would typically pass time by texting Eri to talk about random things. However, after the previous day’s tense situation, Risa wasn’t so sure it would be appropriate for her to contact her kouhai. What if pokepokepu was angry with her?

Heaving a resigned sigh at her predicament, Risa leaned back and sank into the cushy surface of the sofa. Closing her eyes, she considered her options. She could 1) head to the nearby convenience store and see what she could pick up, 2) buy a can drink from the vending machine standing in the corridor or 3) take a leisurely climb up to the rooftop and admire the view and try clearing her mind.

After pondering for a moment, the sub-leader decided to pick option 3.

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Funny, why is the door ajar?

Pushing it further open, Risa slipped past the narrow space cautiously. Panning her eyes around the area, she spotted a lone figure standing near the railings which surrounded the edge of the rooftop. From the back, she seemed small in size, petite to the extent of being scrawny. Dangling from her fingers was a thin lighted cigarette. A trail of smoke rose from the burning end and circled in the air above it.

Risa fought back the urge to charge towards the girl and shake some sense into her. What was she thinking indulging in such an unwanted act? Smoking not only caused fatal health issues, it also affected the vocal chords and decreased one’s stamina. As a singer cum entertainer, they could not afford to let such problems plague them.   

With one hand gripping tightly on the wooden door structure, Risa willed herself to calm down. Instead of confronting her teammate at this juncture, she decided it would be more appropriate to discuss things over with the leader and determine how they should go about persuading her to quit the addiction.

Wait for me. I’ll help you.

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Everyone's eyes were fixated on Eri as she ran through her routine of her solo dance in the middle of the studio. Forming a semi circle around her, all of the juniors in the group were clearly in awe of the fluid manner by which Eri executed her moves. Every twist, wriggle and turn. It was perfect from beginning to end.

Sayumi’s body was angled such that it was impossible for her to observe Eri directly. In addition to that, she was standing, or rather hiding in a corner which had a baby grand piano located a few feet away. The musical instrument conveniently obstructed her line of sight of the dancing girl and she tried hard to not lift her eyes to gawk at Eri’s reflection in the wall of mirrors.

Sayumi knew that Eri was an exceedingly competent dancer. She had secretly stared at her far too many times to not be certain of that fact. It was precisely this talent which repeatedly drew the bunny’s admiring gaze. Yet she knew she could no longer obsess about the feelings she had for Eri. The object of her affections was blissfully in love with their leader and deep down inside, Sayumi knew that Ai was better than her in every aspect.

There was no way in a million years Eri would for even a moment glance her way. Michishige Sayumi was a terrible singer, clumsy dancer and a narcissist to boot. She had absolutely no quality that would make anyone fall in love with her. This was what she thought for the nineteen year old’s confidence level was at an all time low.

Eririn will never like me. No one will ever love me.

She didn’t know that the tears previously brimming in her eyes had started to fall. As they slid down from the ends of her midnight dark orbs, a hand brushed at her cheek to halt their descent.

“Didn’t you tell me to live for myself? Why are you tormenting yourself like this?”

Recognizing the soothing voice of the person who was just as hurt if not more wounded, Sayumi covered Risa’s hand with her own. Squeezing on the limp, she dug her nails into the flesh to release the pent up frustration coursing through her body. Thankfully her preference for short and neat nails meant the pressure generated was still bearable.   

“I want her to love me Gaki-san. I want to be loved.”

Sayumi’s shoulders shook and her knees buckled. She would have hit the floor with a thud if not for Risa who clung on to her waist with both of her arms. Embracing the taller girl in a firm hold, she vowed in a voice which soared above the music which had coincidently ended at this moment.   

“I’ll love you. Even if it costs me my life, I won’t let any harm come to you.”

The aching of her heart diminished when she heard Risa’s assuring words. Her body and actions seemed to take over instinctively and before Sayumi knew what she was doing, she had leaned in to graze pass Risa’s lips. It was tentative at first as she was unsure of how Risa would react. Seeing that she didn’t push her away, Sayumi pressed forward, bringing one hand to Risa’s slender neck and cupping it tenderly.

Her pulse jumped and the intensity with which desire came over her took Sayumi by surprise. It was nothing she had ever experience before and she knew she should stop. Playing with fire was dangerous and she could end up hurting someone who didn’t deserve such cruelty. Nevertheless Sayumi was weak, too weak to resist the strange pull that made her body flush with heat. This sensation resulting from their kiss was intoxicating. It felt so good that she almost didn’t want it to end.

Was it bad for her to feel like this? To crave the intimacy which came when her body was snuggled against Risa’s? The closeness made her feel safe, secure and most of all, loved.

“Don’t leave me, Risa.”

She had called her Risa in place of Gaki-san and the entire room had heard the words bounce off the sound proof walls. Were Niigaki and Michishige-san dating? When did it start and more importantly, when? Koharu, Aika and the pandas were gaping in shock at the astonishing events playing out in front of their eyes and none of them knew what to do. Among the seniors, Ai's expression was unreadable as her face remained stony, her lips pulled in a tight line. Eri had both hands covering her mouth and a storm of emotion was stirring in her eyes.

The last member of the girl group had seen enough. Clenching her fists into balls, she trudged up to the pair still lost in the kiss. Grabbing onto Sayumi’s arm, she wrenched at it forcefully to detach it from resting contentedly on Risa’s abdomen.   

“Don’t use Gaki-san as a replacement. She deserves to be cherished wholeheartedly by a person who truly loves her!”

 
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: ringo-hime on May 22, 2009, 09:56:22 AM
Oh, finally! Reina spoke!!!! WOOO, go Reina fight for your love!!!

Mahn, Risa's got alot of girls hooked to her love nicotine. lmaonade.

I did kinda forgot about Reina while reading the GakiShige part.  :P

But Reina is teh shizzzzzz!!!!  :w00t:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: Sukoshi on May 22, 2009, 11:07:03 AM
@hammy: @ringo-hime: When you said exploding Sayumi the image of her going off into tiny pieces flashed in my mind

LOL remember the story where Eri exploded into a million bits of sugar? that was funny XD

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Oh Sayu...and you say you aren't mad  :sweat:
and geez Eri doing that pity hangout thing because she feels guilty *bad move*
*sigh*  they are so perfect for each other XD

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3) take a leisurely climb up to the rooftop and admire the view and try clearing her mind.

4 hrs later, Risa arrives at the roof XD  (lol sorry my brain just goes there XD)

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Funny, why is the door ajar?  Pushing it further open, Risa slipped past the narrow space cautiously.

hehe Risa learns fast.  I can't help but think she's a little paranoid of the roof now XD

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“I’ll love you. Even if it costs me my life, I won’t let any harm come to you.”
*GASP* :scared: Life?!  not a good sign!  *stares at hammy*

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Her body and actions seemed to take over instinctively and before Sayumi knew what she was doing, she had leaned in to graze pass Risa’s lips.
*GASP* :scared:
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*GASP* :scared: REINA!

ahl Reina's awesome at the end!  Who should Risa pick?!  *ponders*  seems like she actually might have feelings for Sayu but then there's Reina!  Sure she might not smell so good now, smokey smokey and all, but at least she's sincere XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on May 22, 2009, 05:26:21 PM
Ah, I thought things would start getting uncomforably awkward, especially between these two. Seeing how close they are, and then throwing this into the mix just makes for odd little moments like these. Sayu's going with Gaki~ :inlove: I can sooo imagine Gaki being there early. She's so punctual~ :wub: Gah, it's Reina again... :sweatdrop: Awww, a cute little kinda TanaGaki moment. :inlove: And a good way for Ai-chan and Gaki to reconnect. Sayu's got low self esteem....but why? She's an awesome girl~ :thumbsup Wow, so they just kissed in front of everyone?! :lol: And here's Reina again. :grin:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: Kuji on May 22, 2009, 07:02:57 PM
Heh, twice the number of forums, twice the places for me to spam your story. XD

Poor Eri is really getting caught up by this situation while still being the most innocent party. I'm sure it has to be hard on her to have Sayu acting the way she is and I bet she missed those messages that Gaki would usually send her that morning too. Doesn't it seem like this relationship with Ai is basically ruining all her best friendships? So not fair on the poor turtle. :(  Come on, Sayu! Be nicer! It's not like Eri snapped at you in front of the whole group and nearly bit your head off unlike what someone else did to Gaki-san. All Eri did was fall in love. :/

It'd be an even bigger mess if Eri indeed did like Risa too though (which is one of the guesses people are making based on her reaction to the GakiShige kiss, I think - I'd be shocked! ...much like I was shocked with Reina...)... but on the other hand, at least she wouldn't be able to really blame Ai for falling for her best friend either since she could totally empathize with the feeling? :sweatdrop:

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After pondering for a moment, the sub-leader decided to pick option 3.
Gakisan's going to the rooftop again? I hope she remembers the doorstop this time. >_> I'm surprised that she so easily still thought that Reina's smoking was something that she needed to talk to Ai about. It really shows her maturity level. She didn't let Ai's actions of the previous day affect their leader and sub-leader relationship.

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She had absolutely no quality that would make anyone fall in love with her.
Poor Sayu. She seems to have something of a complex. Her weakness in being unable to resist is a bit similar to the weakness she showed earlier with the glass so I found it very believable. It's funny that she's both a strong character and a weak one at the same time. She shows strength when it comes to trying to help Risa but is weak when it comes to herself and resisting comfort as shown later in the chapter. Actually, I think she's a bit like Risa in that way because Risa is shown being strong and competent when it concerns helping others (such as Sayu and Reina) as well but when it comes to her own feelings (such as wallowing in her Ai-induced emo'ness) she needs help from others.

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“I’ll love you. Even if it costs me my life, I won’t let any harm come to you.”
Somehow I don't think Gaki-san meant it that way. Sayu didn't get pushed away though so maybe Gaki-san is getting some comfort where she can get it too and using Sayumi to replace Ai just as Sayu is using her to replace Eri or maybe she really has developed some feelings for the bunny. Anyways, this line from Risa should be enough to make anyone melt - I don't blame Sayu for kissing her after that line. :heart:

As for Reina's accusation. She's spot on but at the same time, would she be so righteous and be there admonishing Sayumi if she didn't want Gaki-san for herself? Probably not and so I don't feel like she's telling Sayu not to use Risa, she's just using that as an excuse to tell her to stay away from Risa. Haha... well, I have to give it to her, at least she knows how to spin things to her advantage. A Sayu-Reina showdown? That would be the most amazing thing everrrrrrrrr.

Hey, how about this as a pick up line for Reina: If you go out with me, Gaki-san... I'll quit smoking! XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 7 (8/5)
Post by: JFC on May 22, 2009, 07:59:30 PM
Chapter 8

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*KAMESHIGE EREBETA*
Said it before and I'll say it again, poor Sayu. :cry:



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I was so worried that you’re still upset. Why don't we visit DisneySea on Saturday? You mentioned wanting to go."

...

A soft ding was heard announcing the arrival of the lift at the designated level prior to the doors sliding open. With a soft tone, Sayumi uttered.

"I thought you would have made plans with Ai. I already asked someone else."

The doors came together again as a lone figure walked out leaving just one member of the pair behind. Without a new destination selected, the motor slowed to a halt and the lift grew silent.

“Sayu…”
Eri = :O

Even with Sayu's previous assertion that she wasn't mad at her, maybe with this, Eri might finally realize just how upset Sayu really is/was.



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*RISA ROOFTOP*
Uh-oh...she spotted Reina? :o



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*EMO SAYU*
:gyaaah:



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*GAKISHIGE*
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEH!??!?!?!??  GAKISHIGE?!?!?!!?
:mon spit: :mon spit: :mon spit: :mon spit: :mon spit:

The saddest thing about it, is that while you know they both honestly care about each other, you know that, more likely than not, this is just happening because they're both hurt over what's been going on and they needed to comfort each other.  It would be so much easier if this had happened without the influence of what they've been recently going through. :(



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Was it bad for her to feel like this? To crave the intimacy which came when her body was snuggled against Risa’s? The closeness made her feel safe, secure and most of all, loved.

“Don’t leave me, Risa.”

She had called her Risa in place of Gaki-san and the entire room had heard the words bounce off the sound proof walls. Were Niigaki and Michishige-san dating? When did it start and more importantly, when? Koharu, Aika and the pandas were gaping in shock at the astonishing events playing out in front of their eyes and none of them knew what to do. Among the seniors, Ai's expression was unreadable as her face remained stony, her lips pulled in a tight line. Eri had both hands covering her mouth and a storm of emotion was stirring in her eyes.
Sayu = :pleeease:
Koharu/Aika/JunLin = :stunned:
Aichan = :mon suspect:
Eri = :gmon tears:


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The last member of the girl group had seen enough. Clenching her fists into balls, she trudged up to the pair still lost in the kiss. Grabbing onto Sayumi’s arm, she wrenched at it forcefully to detach it from resting contentedly on Risa’s abdomen.   

“Don’t use Gaki-san as a replacement. She deserves to be cherished wholeheartedly by a person who truly loves her!”
Reina =  :mon mad:


Ohcrap.

/me looks for an umbrella and shelter.



Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: Yuuyami on May 22, 2009, 08:17:20 PM
Holy shit, that was an intense chapter!! -BUT WAS OKAY! had a hard hat on-

-gives JFC a hardhat too- '_'

The moment that really stuck out to me was when Gakishige had the liplock and everyone's shock right after. It was Ai and Eri's reactions which really stuck out to me the most. With the way Ai reacted, I couldn't help but wonder if she caught onto the emotional torment that the two were going through and had concluded that they were only doing it just to get back at her and Eri, since her reaction seemed more akin to disappointment and maybe even a lil anger. Eri's reaction was just normal, I think she was more wtf about it more than anything xDDD

But dang, Reina was right, it's only right for Risa to have someone that actually cherishes her instead of being used as rebound :0...

But given the attitude, it's bound to get pretty messy... >_<....

Looking forward to next chappie, Hamminz~! -holds onto hardhat!-
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on May 23, 2009, 02:25:09 AM
:o...

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SAYUUUU!!! :cry: You know, you've made me realize that AiEri just causes hell. I mean, Eri pairs with almost anyone, and Ai is pretty popular herself (pimp XD).  Put the two together and you get a mess of broken hearts all around. D:

GakiShige is great, but I don't think it's feeling as genuine as it should be... *worries*  And as for Reina... *sigh* Now she has to deal with smoking AND Risa. T___T
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: AuburnChicken on May 23, 2009, 03:27:45 AM
Oh my..  One can only imagine all the awkward fallout from this pining and public displays of affection.  Looking forward to reading about what you write next.  Poor girls are going to have some angst ridden tension filled fun in the changing rooms.  More entertaining than a reality TV show. 

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Playing with fire was dangerous and she could end up hurting someone who didn’t deserve such cruelty
 

I don't see anything cruel about Sayumi offering her kisses to Gaki.  This is what Gaki wants.   Rejecting Gaki would be worse.  Sayumi hasn't promised anything to her ... yet.....

This is entertaining.  It will be interesting seeing how Gaki reacts to Reina's outburst. 
"Passive Aggressive Anyone?".   

I'm bookmarking this thread.  Looking forward to the next chapter. 

 
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: stefy on May 23, 2009, 04:46:17 AM
Reina likes Risa?... *re-reads chap 7*

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REINA LIKES RISA! Man this is like a love... circle. Or maybe not.

Tsk tsk, Eri's feeling all guilty... but its a bit too late right? I think it's gonna be really hard to try patch things up now.

Wait, if Sayu's using Risa as a rebound... then isn't Risa using Sayu as a rebound as well? ... Oh poor poor Reina... it'll take a while till Risa notices her that way XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: kRisZ on May 24, 2009, 03:49:04 PM
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“I didn’t mean to hurt you. Why can’t you be like Gaki-san? She knows when to let me be.”

She's in love with Risa


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Why does your world consist of only Ai-chan? Can’t you see that I’m love with you?

She's in love with Risa too


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Instead of confronting her teammate at this juncture, she decided it would be more appropriate to discuss things over with the leader and determine how they should go about persuading her to quit the addiction.

so mature and responsible


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Ai's expression was unreadable as her face remained stony, her lips pulled in a tight line. Eri had both hands covering her mouth and a storm of emotion was stirring in her eyes.

Jealous jealous


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Grabbing onto Sayumi’s arm, she wrenched at it forcefully to detach it from resting contentedly on Risa’s abdomen. 
“Don’t use Gaki-san as a replacement. She deserves to be cherished wholeheartedly by a person who truly loves her!”

ouches

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 8 (22/5)
Post by: lil_hamz on June 01, 2009, 12:55:33 PM
Merry Go Round
Chapter 9


"Stay out of this."

Sayumi's voice was low, menacing even when she ordered Reina to keep her nose out of her business. Usually she was a person who was rather easy going and open to discussion. But this time, she felt an unmistakable tinge of threat coming from the yankii. Was Reina going to contest with her for Risa's attention? She had already lost Eri to Ai, she wasn't going to lose Risa without a fight.

"Woah guys, cool down!"

Attempting to separate the two who were currently staring at each other like wild lions fighting over a single prey, Risa pushed Reina slightly backwards by pressing her hands against the front of the shorter girl’s shoulders. She thought the situation could be kept under control as long as she kept them apart. Unbeknownst to her, the deterioration of the situation was just beginning.

"It's not going to do anyone any good if you use Gaki-san as a shield."

Mumbling the lone sentence in a significantly less irate voice, Reina reasoned with her fellow generation member. Although she could empathize with Sayumi's circumstance, she couldn't agree with the bunny's method of handling things. Reina believed Sayumi’s actions would no doubt draw more innocent people into the already complicated web of affairs. Unfortunately, the well-meaning fan of leopard prints didn't realize that her actions in the following moments would further add fuel to the fire.

"What do you know?!"

Narrowing her eyes at her newly acquired enemy, Sayumi took a step forwards such that Risa was now caught between the two feuding parties. Ai-chan, aren't you going to do something? Risa's frantic gaze flicked over to where the leader was standing with Eri. Kame was hiding in Ai's embrace as she wept softly into her girlfriend’s chest. It was evident that the series of events was too much for the confrontation shy turtle to take. In the split second where sub-leader and leader’s gaze met, it was obvious that the older woman did not intend to get herself involved.

Furrowing her brows in exasperation when she observed Ai's chosen reaction, which was none, Risa realized she was on her own. Turning back to face the agitated girls, she said.

"Listen, whatever problem we have here, we can solve it after the rehearsal. If you didn't already notice, we're holding everyone back."

Grasping onto both Sayumi and Reina's forearm in a firm grip, Risa made it clear she wasn't going to tolerate anymore nonsense. She felt Sayumi's tense arm slacken and Risa knew she had gotten through to her. Lifting her eyes to the face of the one with raven locks, Risa smiled gently. Returning the kind gesture, Sayumi leaned in to give Risa a thank you kiss on the cheek.

Blind rage overtook Reina’s entire being when she observed their intimate behavior. Absolutely livid that her repeated warnings had been so blatantly ignored, Reina lunged for the self-proclaimed narcissist while letting out an ear-shattering scream.

"DIDN’T YOU HEAR WHAT REINA SAID?!"

Seeing the astonishing turn of events, Eri detached herself from Ai's side and rushed to her fallen friend while Risa struggled to pull Reina off Sayumi. Sprawled flat on her back with her ankle twisted at a horrible angle, Sayumi grimaced as beads of sweat appeared on her forehead.

"Omg Sayu."

Despite her unabashed anxiety, Eri's voice was completely drowned out by Reina's screaming and Sayumi never got to hear the concerned words from the person she loved.

"JUST BECAUSE ERI DOESN'T LOVE YOU BACK DOESN'T MEAN YOU HAVE THE RIGHT TO MAKE USE OF GAKI-SAN!"

The startling revelation was shouted out so loudly that it was impossible for anyone in the room to not understand how the argument had stemmed. Somewhere in the group of closely huddled kouhais, the uneasy gulping of saliva could be heard.

Faced with such an awful and suffocating situation, Risa felt like she was going to collapse. Reina had just declared to the whole group that Sayumi was in love with Eri who was already pursuing a relationship with Ai. Why was Reina so riled up about this anyway?

Shaking her head resignedly, Risa winced at the sudden paralyzing pain shooting through her abdomen. She hadn’t eaten anything since the previous night and unquestionably, her gastric problem was acting up again. Could this evening get any worse?

"Mittsui, share a cab with Lin Lin and Koharu. Send me a text message each time one of you arrive home."

Recognizing that Aika was the most mature and reliable of the three youngest members, Ai entrusted her with the task of seeing the others home. Pulling some bills out from her purse, she handed them to Aika before ushering the trio out of the studio. Heading for Eri who was kneeling down next to Sayumi, she bent down to pull her up.

"Pack our bags, I'll see you home."

Nodding obediently at Ai, Eri glanced forlornly at Sayumi before going to gather their belongings.

"Jun Jun, please bring Sayumi to a doctor and let me know how it went."

"Hai!"

The tall Chinese girl proceeded to join Eri in the corner where the member's bags were scattered and began to stuff her possessions as well as Sayumi's into their respective duffels. After she was done, she helped Sayumi up and with one arm supporting the injured girl's waist and the other holding onto her arm, Jun Jun led the hobbling girl towards the exit.

Somewhat satisfied that most of the girls were taken care of, Ai motioned for Risa to come over.

"It's best if you settle whatever problems you have with the kouhais before coming to work. This is the second time something has happened because of you."

Ending her little speech with an emotionless goodbye, Ai linked hands with Eri and left the room.

Because of you.

Risa repeated that accusation silently in her mind and laughed mockingly at herself. Yeah, everything was happening because of me, all of this was my fault. She didn't know that Reina was presently watching her every move from the other end of the room and feeling extremely guilty for once again indirectly getting her in trouble.

Smacking her palms on either of her cheeks, Risa twirled around on her heel to face the other remaining occupant of the room. Fully aware that she had to sort things out with Reina before Ai next asked her, Risa strolled up to the smaller girl.

“We need to talk.”

“I know of a good pub.”

Arching one brow, Risa considered Reina’s suggestion. Talking things over at a pub was a good plan since the environment was rather conducive for Reina to let her guard down and tell her the reason behind the earlier outburst and her smoking addiction. The sub-leader was certain no one else had any inkling of Reina's puffing inclination hence she had to handle this carefully.

Risa wondered if she should call Ai along. Having one more person convince Reina to kick the habit meant a higher chance of succeeding. However, recalling Ai's expression when she was talking to her made Risa cringe. She could tell from Ai's body language that she didn't want to spend any more time than absolutely necessary with her.

Fine, I shall talk to Reina myself.

Convincing herself that she could do this alone, Risa agreed to Reina's proposition. Normally the twenty year old had enough good sense in her to know this wasn't a good idea. Reina was still underage and if they were to be recognized, things could get problematic. Nevertheless, Risa followed behind Reina into an awaiting cab and settled on the leather seats as the vehicle headed for the popular club Reina had suggested.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 9 (01/06)
Post by: ringo-hime on June 01, 2009, 03:00:33 PM
OMG YAY~!
Reina outburst saikou~!  XD
I feel bad for Sayu..she's hurt.  :(
Sheesh Ai, no need to be so cold~~~  :angry:

Ahhh~ Reina and Gaki talk. finally. Mi ish excited~  :twisted: :twisted:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 9 (01/06)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on June 01, 2009, 03:46:41 PM
I think I enjoyed this waaaaay too much. XD Poor Gaki, though, trying so hard to retain unity without the support of Ai-chan, the leader. :sweatdrop: And this lack of loving, sexy, and fluffy TakaGaki makes my heart hurt. :( I'm quite curious how this little TanaGaki meeting is going to turn out. Perhaps a love confession? :grin:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 9 (01/06)
Post by: JFC on June 01, 2009, 07:52:32 PM
Merry Go Round
Chapter 9


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"Stay out of this."

Sayumi's voice was low, menacing even when she ordered Reina to keep her nose out of her business. Usually she was a person who was rather easy going and open to discussion. But this time, she felt an unmistakable tinge of threat coming from the yankii. Was Reina going to contest with her for Risa's attention? She had already lost Eri to Ai, she wasn't going to lose Risa without a fight.
Sayu =  :angry:
Reina =  :angry:
Everyone else =  :sweatdrop: :shocked



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Risa's frantic gaze flicked over to where the leader was standing with Eri. Kame was hiding in Ai's embrace as she wept softly into her girlfriend’s chest. It was evident that the series of events was too much for the confrontation shy turtle to take. In the split second where sub-leader and leader’s gaze met, it was obvious that the older woman did not intend to get herself involved.
Oh really now? Is this out of some sense of self-preservation (i.e. not wanting to get in the middle of a bunny-cat fight) or is there...something...else to it? :?



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"Listen, whatever problem we have here, we can solve it after the rehearsal. If you didn't already notice, we're holding everyone back."

Grasping onto both Sayumi and Reina's forearm in a firm grip, Risa made it clear she wasn't going to tolerate anymore nonsense. She felt Sayumi's tense arm slacken and Risa knew she had gotten through to her.
Oh, nicely done Risa. Authoritative, yet not picking any one side. :thumbsup



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Lifting her eyes to the face of the one with raven locks, Risa smiled gently. Returning the kind gesture, Sayumi leaned in to give Risa a thank you kiss on the cheek.
Uh-oh.  :-X



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*REINA FLIPS OUT*
Omgass, Reina!
:scared:

OMGASS, SAYU'S HURT! :mon scare:



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"JUST BECAUSE ERI DOESN'T LOVE YOU BACK DOESN'T MEAN YOU HAVE THE RIGHT TO MAKE USE OF GAKI-SAN!"

The startling revelation was shouted out so loudly that it was impossible for anyone in the room to not understand how the argument had stemmed. Somewhere in the group of closely huddled kouhais, the uneasy gulping of saliva could be heard.

...


...


...


Oh.........shit. :mon wtf:



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*AICHAN TAKES CHARGE*
Dang...THIS is what it took to get a reaction out of her? :O



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Somewhat satisfied that most of the girls were taken care of, Ai motioned for Risa to come over.

"It's best if you settle whatever problems you have with the kouhais before coming to work. This is the second time something has happened because of you."

Ending her little speech with an emotionless goodbye, Ai linked hands with Eri and left the room.

Because of you.
Hidoiiiiiiiiiiiiii.
:stunned:



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Risa strolled up to the smaller girl.

“We need to talk.”

“I know of a good pub.”

Arching one brow, Risa considered Reina’s suggestion. Talking things over at a pub was a good plan since the environment was rather conducive for Reina to let her guard down and tell her the reason behind the earlier outburst and her smoking addiction.

...

Fine, I shall talk to Reina myself.
Something tells me Risa needs to get straight which issue she's going to prioritize in this talk with Reina. Scolding her for smoking would seem like it should be the least of her worries.



Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 9 (01/06)
Post by: KonaKaga on June 01, 2009, 08:28:13 PM
I didn't have enough time to read the newest chapter this morning so I printed it out and read it during school XD
OMG at all the angst.
OMG at Reina actually hurting Sayu :cry: OMG at the whole fight thing :cry: OMG at Ai-chan still acting coldly towards Risa :cry:
GENERAL OMG :cry:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 9 (01/06)
Post by: Sukoshi on June 02, 2009, 10:45:04 AM
wah Cat fight! :mon scare: and a jaw dropping one at that!  It was so intense that I read this chapter twice!  I can't believe smokey-the-cat has the most sense out of everyone, sans smoking and drinking of course. 

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"DIDN’T YOU HEAR WHAT REINA SAID?!"

lol she's so cute when she's angry XD  I love Reina, wish she didn't hurt Sayu though....poor thing.  I feel so bad for her every chapter.  You better not make her suffer too much!  No oceans! and glass...and on coming traffic!  more heart-break is perfectly welcomed though  :sweat:

as for Ai chan.... :mon mad:  there are no words!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 9 (01/06)
Post by: alwaysYou on June 02, 2009, 02:24:07 PM
awww..you are so bad..you make aichan look so bad in this fic and make people hate her..*humpt*  :angry:
XD XD
hope they realise their own true feeling..

it make me feel that when aichan realise her own feeling to gakisan..gakisan have already move on with others..that will be SAD!!!..=x..
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 9 (01/06)
Post by: takagakifan on June 03, 2009, 02:53:50 AM
oh holy mother of awesomeness

Risa is pulling the musumes like woah supah pimpin it :theking (yea im gangsta like  O0 teehee).... albiet unintentionally lol...
Quite honestly i love all gaki centered pairings though TakaGaki has always been numero uno... i also had GakiShige, TanaGaki, in a close second and seeing how in this fic Ai is for lack of a better word a raging territorial Biatch TakaGaki went out the window how managed to do that to an avid TG shipper as myself... WOW :bow:

i had more to say but i forgot :sweatdrop: so um keep up the good work i cant wait for the next update
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 9 (01/06)
Post by: kRisZ on June 06, 2009, 01:32:05 PM
Yay! Yay! Yay! Update!!!  :w00t:


SayuReina fight's whoa

Ai's actions and chosen words are kinda  :shocked,  but I could feel that there's something behind those actions... jealousy perhaps.?.

Talk in a pub, sounds interesting   :cow:   another merry-go-round.?.  :twisted:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 9 (01/06)
Post by: lil_hamz on June 11, 2009, 04:44:17 PM
I’m a bad Ham Ham. Why? Cuz I’m too lazy to reply to comments? :P I will though!! I always do. I’m just slow? And lazy XD Oh and the forum loads really slowly for me *not an excuse* HONTO!! Please don’t stop your nice comments because I love reading them and they give me motivation to write.

*stares at BOD* You better comment. :D

PS: I apologize in advance for this chapter as it’s not well written. I kinda rushed through it? I hope there aren’t too many mistakes in any form.

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 10

The two girls slid onto the high chairs situated at the bar counter and waited for someone to come over and attend to them. The pub/club was rather crowded with hordes of people cramped on the dance floor and many more mulling around the area they were seated at.

"God, I can't hear myself think!"

"Yeah isn't it great?!"

Referring to the overly loud pulsing techno song blasting out of the hidden speakers, Risa rolled her eyes resignedly when Reina missed her point entirely and continued bobbing her head to the music. Risa had meant that the place was far too noisy for her liking and that she did not appreciate having her eardrums shatter from the loud volume.

Scanning her brownish eyes around the vicinity, the older girl couldn't help but raise her brows when she noticed the appearance of the crowd who frequented the 'joint'. Many of them were dressed in clothes that screamed trouble. Inwardly hoping that her decision to follow Reina here wasn't wrong, Risa prayed that no one would make trouble for them and they could spend the night chatting in peace. At this moment, a bartender with an exceptional number of facial piercings leaned over the counter and asked for their drink orders.

"Apple martini and an orange juice."

"I don't do apple martinis...wait a minute, don't tell me you got me orange juice?!"

Waving frantically to the departing lad in an attempt to draw his attention, Reina flopped back down on her stool in a huff when she failed to get herself another drink. An alcoholic one.

"I can't believe you did that!"

Her wonky eye got even more crossed as the yankii fumed like a kitty cat which had just lost it's fish.

"You are still underaged Tanakacchi. And no, turning 20 in some months doesn't mean you can start drinking now."

"Gaki-san is mean!"

Folding her arms across her chest, Reina pouted and angled her head away from her senpai. As a result of her childish behaviour, her sole companion for the night chuckled amusedly. The elder rested her weight on her right elbow and reached over to tap Reina’s forearm with her left hand.

"Mou, Tanakacchi, don't be mad. I promise to take you out when you're allowed to drink legally."

"I'll hold you to that!"

Wagging a manicured finger at Risa, Reina smirked victoriously at having gotten her way. Her aim was to get Risa to go drinking with her alone and it seemed that she had achieved that goal without much effort.

"So, wanna tell me what happened back there?"

Deciding to steer the conversation in a more solemn direction after the bartender had set down their drinks on the paper coasters, Risa took a big gulp from her glass before gazing into the younger's eyes. Sensing that Risa wasn't going to let her off until she had heard a satisfactory answer, Reina chose to avert her line of vision from Risa's by keeping it trained on a couple dancing exceedingly near each other.

"It wasn't anything personal. I guess I was just stressed out from our crazy schedule."

It was clear from Risa's expression that she wasn't completely convinced by Reina's explanation. Nevertheless, she didn't persist in beating the truth out of her. Taking another long swig, Risa emptied her glass and called for another. When a screwdriver cocktail was placed in front of her, she stared at it for a second before taking Reina's hands in her own and giving them a light squeeze.

"I want you to know that you can always come to me. If you need to talk about something, anything, don't hesitate to call."

"Okay."

Promising Risa that she would, Reina finally gathered enough courage to look into the face of the woman she loved secretly. She was deeply touched that Risa had taken out time to speak with her after work hours. The concern she expressed wasn’t lost on Reina and this action by the ever reliable sub-leader only made the relatively new smoker fall harder for her. Studying Risa at such close range without any disruptions permitted Reina the opportunity to observe the object of her affections and take in every fine detail of her perfect features.

God knows you are beautiful.

Completely engrossed in watching her, Reina didn’t notice that Risa had downed her 3rd drink, a strawberry mojito and was about to order a fourth until the bartender asked.

“Are you sure?”

“It...’s f-f-fine.”

Risa’s speech was slurred and she was propping her head up with her palm. Noting the reddening flush staining her cheeks, Reina shooed the guy off and called for the check.

“Gaki-san, are you okay?”

“Y-yeah. I’m grrrrrrrrreat!”

Normally Reina would have laughed out loud after hearing anyone shout out such a sentence. The intonation of her words sounded exactly like the cereal commercial Reina grew up watching. However, the extent and speed by which Risa became intoxicated was much too quick for someone of her body mass.

“Can you stand?”

Supporting Risa out of the club after she had paid the bill. Reina was lucky enough to flag a cab down the instant they were out on the streets. In no time, the petite but strong girl had gotten Risa back to her vacant apartment and into bed.

“You're gonna have one nasty hangover tomorrow.”

Muttering to no one in particular, Reina turned on her heel and was about to walk off to switch off the lights in the room so Risa could rest better when a hand shot out and grabbed at her wrist. Caught by surprise, Reina lost her balance and fell backwards in a less than elegant manner.

Finding herself lying almost completely on top of Risa with their lips only inches apart, Reina flinched when she felt the heated breath being blown softly onto her face. Risa was evidently slipping in and out of consciousness and the way her cheeks were stained by a light pink blush made her appear even more alluring than she already was.

Unable to resist the tantalizing lips she could so easily kiss, Reina's resolve faltered and she at last succumbed to temptation. Running a shaking hand over Risa’s bangs to brush them aside, she dipped her head lower to reach Risa's mouth. Shifting her other hand to cover Risa's wholly by fitting her fingers snugly within those beneath, Reina tightened her grip and pressed down against Risa's body. When the girl below returned her kisses with similar relish, Reina's heart thumped faster and she was absolutely giddy with joy.

At the back of her mind, Reina knew Risa was probably too smashed to know what she was doing. Nevertheless, she couldn't help the blood rush and mind-blowing sensation that she felt exploding inside each time she tasted Risa's skin. Every time she came into contact with Risa, the young woman's heart skipped a beat and she craved for more. Much more than she knew she could ever possibly have.

Her hand fumbled clumsily over the buttons on Risa's shirt. One, two...three...Just as she was about to tear the garment completely off, Reina heard a soft but distinct whisper. Transferring her gaze once again to Risa's mouth, Reina saw them move. The words which left those slightly parted lips made Reina freeze and cease all further action.

"I love you...Ai-chan."

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"Why did things have to be like this Ai-chan? I don't want to lose Sayu as a friend. She's my best friend!"

Although Ai was cradling Eri in her arms and consoling the distraught girl by rubbing her on the back comfortingly for the past twenty minutes, her mind was not on her girlfriend. Questions about her whereabouts, what she was doing and who she was with consumed her thoughts.

So preoccupied with the other woman, Ai didn't realize Eri had fallen asleep until the turtle girl's head rolled from the nook of her neck into empty space. Realizing that Eri had once again demonstrated her uncanny talent to fall asleep at any time and place, Ai grinned and carefully maneuvered the sleeping girl onto her lap. For some unknown reason, she started patting Eri on the shoulder whilst she slept soundly. As the seconds ticked by, Eri's breathing became shallower and more rhythmic.

"Seeing you makes me happy. Being with you makes me smile. But..."

Halting the patting action, Ai felt a lone tear fall from her eye. She wasn’t sure what made her cry but there was one thing she was certain of. The affections she had for Eri were becoming more and more like those one has towards a younger sibling. Why hadn't she realized this earlier? Did she make a mistake right from the start? Had she somehow mistaken kinship for love?

Why is my head filled with images of you? Why am I thinking of you when I’m holding Eri? Why Gaki-san, why?
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 10 (11/06)
Post by: ringo-hime on June 11, 2009, 04:57:07 PM
YOu big meanie. XD

Just get and Ai and Gaki-san together.

Eh..what will Reina do now? O_O
And how will Ai-chan tell Eri..or wtv she's gonna do to get Gaki-san...XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 10 (11/06)
Post by: JFC on June 11, 2009, 05:30:53 PM
Merry Go Round
Chapter 10


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"God, I can't hear myself think!"

"Yeah isn't it great?!"

Referring to the overly loud pulsing techno song blasting out of the hidden speakers, Risa rolled her eyes resignedly when Reina missed her point entirely and continued bobbing her head to the music. Risa had meant that the place was far too noisy for her liking and that she did not appreciate having her eardrums shatter from the loud volume.
I've got to side with Risa on this one. I've never liked going to clubs/parties/whatever where the music is being pumped out so loudly that your ears are ringing the next day.



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"Apple martini and an orange juice."

"I don't do apple martinis...wait a minute, don't tell me you got me orange juice?!"

...

"You are still underaged Tanakacchi. And no, turning 20 in some months doesn't mean you can start drinking now."

"Gaki-san is mean!"
Oh Risa, so clueless and innocent to many of the ways of the yankii. :lol:



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"Mou, Tanakacchi, don't be mad. I promise to take you out when you're allowed to drink legally."

"I'll hold you to that!"

Wagging a manicured finger at Risa, Reina smirked victoriously at having gotten her way. Her aim was to get Risa to go drinking with her alone and it seemed that she had achieved that goal without much effort.
Reina just scored a date and Risa didn't realize it! 8)



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"I want you to know that you can always come to me. If you need to talk about something, anything, don't hesitate to call."

"Okay."

Promising Risa that she would, Reina finally gathered enough courage to look into the face of the woman she loved secretly. She was deeply touched that Risa had taken out time to speak with her after work hours. The concern she expressed wasn’t lost on Reina and this action by the ever reliable sub-leader only made the relatively new smoker fall harder for her. Studying Risa at such close range without any disruptions permitted Reina the opportunity to observe the object of her affections and take in every fine detail of her perfect features.

God knows you are beautiful.
Awwwwwwwwwwwwww... :wub:



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Completely engrossed in watching her, Reina didn’t notice that Risa had downed her 3rd drink, a strawberry mojito and was about to order a fourth until the bartender asked.

“Are you sure?”

“It...’s f-f-fine.”

Risa’s speech was slurred and she was propping her head up with her palm. Noting the reddening flush staining her cheeks, Reina shooed the guy off and called for the check.
Oh boy...tipsy Risa? :P



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*REINA TAKES TIPSY RISA HOME*
Oooooooooooooooooooh boy...this could end badly...:o



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Her hand fumbled clumsily over the buttons on Risa's shirt. One, two...three...Just as she was about to tear the garment completely off, Reina heard a soft but distinct whisper. Transferring her gaze once again to Risa's mouth, Reina saw them move. The words which left those slightly parted lips made Reina freeze and cease all further action.

"I love you...Ai-chan."
Dammit, I knew it.  :shocked



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"Why did things have to be like this Ai-chan? I don't want to lose Sayu as a friend. She's my best friend!"

Although Ai was cradling Eri in her arms and consoling the distraught girl by rubbing her on the back comfortingly for the past twenty minutes, her mind was not on her girlfriend. Questions about her whereabouts, what she was doing and who she was with consumed her thoughts.
Don't tell me, lemme guess. All this time Aichan's been in denial over, or has just never realized, her feelings for Risa.  O0



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Halting the patting action, Ai felt a lone tear fall from her eye. She wasn’t sure what made her cry but there was one thing she was certain of. The affections she had for Eri were becoming more and more like those one has towards a younger sibling. Why hadn't she realized this earlier? Did she make a mistake right from the start? Had she somehow mistaken kinship for love?

Why is my head filled with images of you? Why am I thinking of you when I’m holding Eri? Why Gaki-san, why?
Oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooh yeah. Totally called it.  :pimp:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 10 (11/06)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on June 11, 2009, 07:26:10 PM
LMAO at Reina, the whole clubbing thing and drinking thing= XD But whoa, it's Gaki who gets all tipsy~ As much as I want a TanaGaki thing to happen, I can't deny my love for TakaGaki, which seems so rare these days. :heart: But it still has to hurt Reina that Gaki's thinking of Ai-chan.... :( I think perhaps our leader is happy that Eri is so pokepokepuu b/c then she won't notice how distracted she is.
Oh and:
“Y-yeah. I’m grrrrrrrrreat!”
Frosted Flakes, they're more than good~ :P
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 10 (11/06)
Post by: Kuji on June 12, 2009, 08:59:01 PM
Oh yeah, I forgot to say something in my earlier post on this chapter on the other board (I know! I know! How could I possibly have more to say, right?). :sweatdrop:

I have to wonder if Risa drinks like this everytime she goes out bar hopping or whatever. I mean it's worrying because even Tanakachi couldn't resist somewhat taking advantage of the situation, right? Who is to say what has happened when she went out drinking with others. >_> Oh Gaki-san, take care of yourself!

/end

I kept it short(ish) somehow! \o/ *proud*

(and I cracked up a the Frosties moment too.) XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 10 (11/06)
Post by: Sukoshi on June 12, 2009, 11:15:01 PM
wah.  this new chapter has me going Ouch! and double Ouch!  Poor poor Tanakacchi!  and Eri! 

You know for a moment there, when Eri first started talking about how Sayu's her best friend, I was totally rooting for her!  I thought Eri was finally gonna do something or at least voice her opinion about the whole mess and well..then she fell asleep XD

and why Ai chan, why?!  Still shaking my fist in the air for her being slow XD  Sisterly love?!  once again poor Eri.  Mr. Moonlight here better not be breaking her heart until Eri patches things up with Sayu...else whose she going to go crying to?!   :on speedy:  and it better not be a junior!  cause they are traumatized enough as is XD

oh yeah before I forget...I love the light humor thrown in at the yankii bar XD  I'll never look at Tony of the Tiger the same again XD






Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 10 (11/06)
Post by: KonaKaga on June 14, 2009, 02:00:14 AM
OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG
This is one heck of a story your brewing up here Hamzy! :shocked
So basically:
Eri --> Ai
Ai --> Eri/Risa
Risa --> Ai
Reina --> Risa
Sayu --> Eri

...oh no...
I'm guessing that Sayu and Eri are gonna end up together somehow and Ai-chan and Risa might?

LOL Ai-chan feels a sistery love for Eri? If she's considering this a sisterly love then she's just commited incest!
..... :P
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 10 (11/06)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on June 14, 2009, 02:50:54 AM
Reviewed at H!O, but now I'm here, too. :)

D: ERIIIIII. :cry: I hope she'll voice her opinion soon. I'm sorry to say this, but she's pretty useless at this point. But Ai! Oh god Ai! What the hell have you done!? Sisterly love for someone who you've already... GAH. >.<

Heartbroken Reina = Heartbroken Shicchan. ;_;
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 10 (11/06)
Post by: kRisZ on June 14, 2009, 03:52:09 PM
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God knows you are beautiful.

indeed  :yep:


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Unable to resist the tantalizing lips she could so easily kiss, Reina's resolve faltered and she at last succumbed to temptation. Running a shaking hand over Risa’s bangs to brush them aside, she dipped her head lower to reach Risa's mouth. Shifting her other hand to cover Risa's wholly by fitting her fingers snugly within those beneath, Reina tightened her grip and pressed down against Risa's body. When the girl below returned her kisses with similar relish, Reina's heart thumped faster and she was absolutely giddy with joy.

Yay  :cow:


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"I love you...Ai-chan."

ouches


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Why is my head filled with images of you? Why am I thinking of you when I’m holding Eri? Why Gaki-san, why?

 :(   maybe because you're too coward.?.  :grin:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: lil_hamz on July 21, 2009, 07:28:56 AM
@ringo-hime: Me? A meanie? *Looks both ways* *blink* *innocent* :P

@JFC: Me too. I don't like ultra noisy places. I like the current way my ears function XD

@strawb3rrykream: Agreed. I love Frosted Flakes :D

@Kuji-san: I don't even wanna think what happens to Risa when she goes drinking in real life *tries to block thoughts* :doh:

@Sukoshi: Eri just has this image of being able to fall asleep anywhere so hee hee...I had to write that in. Kinda anti-climax huh :lol:

@KK: OMG KK! Incest? Gosh, you had me laughing hard there XD

@Shiichan: I should be making Eri do something soon. She has been in the background for quite a while :smhid

@kRisZ: Ai does seem like a coward here but then again, she still isn't sure of her own feelings :cry:

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 11

"Ow....Ouch....GAH!!!"

Yelping in obvious pain with every step that she took, Sayumi leaned heavily on Jun Jun as the taller girl helped her over to the living room couch.

"Don't let water touch your feet."

It took some time for Sayumi to comprehend what Jun Jun was saying. The native Chinese's Japanese language skills were still a little rough around the edges in spite of having spent two years living in Japan.

"I think you meant ankle. But thanks for taking me to the doctor and home."

Bowing to acknowledge Sayumi's appreciation, Jun Jun straightened back up and just stood there for a moment. The two girls remained in awkward silence until one of them decided to speak.

"Michishige-san, I know it's not my place to say this but you should move on. Loving someone doesn't mean possessing them. Sometimes just watching them from the shadows and seeing their happy smile is enough."

Her little speech left Sayumi stunned in more ways than one. She hadn't expected any of the kouhais to come out in the open and talk about this topic let alone start giving her advice.

“Jun Jun...”

“Goodnight Michishige-san!”

Bidding her senpai goodbye hastily, Jun Jun scrambled to gather her belongings before running for the exit. She bowed a few more times then proceeded to slam the entry shut leaving Sayumi slack jawed and staring at her closed door in a daze.

“What the...”

After focusing her thoughts wholly on the 8th generation member and scrutinizing her daily behavior in her mind’s eye, it finally occurred to Sayumi the possible reason behind Jun Jun’s outburst.

Could Jun Jun be in love with one of the members?!

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The clam shell device vibrated and twirled about on the nightstand, its lights flashing intermittently as a call was being made to it. Trying to reach for the object from the other end of the queen-sized bed where she was lying, Risa struggled to drag herself nearer the piece of wooden furniture located next to the bed.

Clutching at the sheets with trembling hands to pull herself slowly forward, she unintentionally knocked a couple of uncapped bottles off the bed. The white plastic containers fell to the floor and scattered their contents everywhere. The pills in various colors lay strewn about as Risa finally managed to clasp her phone.

Click.

“Gaki-san!”

Wailing into her cellphone, Sayumi cried out dramatically, complaining to the first person she thought of to notify about her latest discovery.

“I think Jun Jun likes someone!”

“Who do you think it could be?”

“What if it’s Eririn too?”

“What do I do Gaki-san?”

It wasn’t long before Sayumi realized that the sub-leader wasn’t answering her. Thinking that Risa wasn’t paying her any attention, Sayumi pouted even though there was no one around to see it.

“It really isn’t much fun speaking to yourself.”

Tilting her head and resting an elbow on the arm rest of the sofa, Sayumi waited for a reply. Instead of an answer in the form of words, a strange sound entered her ears. Sitting up in her seat unconsciously, Sayumi strained her hearing to recognize what the noise was.

“Gaki-san? Gaki-san what’s wrong?!”

However, Sayumi never got an answer as the line got cut off after a deafening thud…

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Ai didn’t know how many hours had passed since Eri dozed off. She only knew the time she had spent watching Eri sleep had been both serene and confusing. After staring at Eri's sleeping face for the entire duration, she still didn’t know which category the love she felt for the turtle fell into or which direction she should be steering their relationship.

“The one I love is you…right?”

Before she could reconfirm her thoughts, the bulge in her jeans pocket quivered. Thankfully she had switched her phone to silent mode beforehand or the abrupt ringing would have woken Eri. Stretching one leg out so that she could access the device with greater ease, Ai pressed on the green accept button to connect the call.

“Gomene Ai-chan for calling so late. I would have gone to check on her myself but my ankle…”

“Slow down Sayumi. What are you talking about? Check on who?”

Speaking as softly as she could so as to not disturb the blissfully snoozing girl, Ai covered her mouth and bottom portion of her phone with one hand whilst leaning further away from Eri.

“I dialed Gaki-san and the call got through but she didn’t speak. Then the line went dead and I can’t get her ever since. I’m worried something might have happened.”

“Perhaps her battery went flat?”

Attempting to calm Sayumi down with a reasonable explanation for the seemingly bizarre occurrence, Ai coaxed Sayumi to go to bed. She should be resting early to hasten her recovery. There was an upcoming Morning Musume concert and it wouldn’t do Sayumi any good if she were to miss too many rehearsals. The delay could disrupt or affect her other job assignments.

“I’m sure it’s nothing. She probably fell asleep.”

The rokkie wasn't completely convinced by Ai’s reckoning. Nevertheless, she chose not to second guess the leader. If Ai said that there was nothing to worry about then she was probably over-reacting. In any case, the older woman should know Risa best after having spent more than eight years with her. Pushing whatever doubts she had out of her mind, Sayumi hanged up the phone and shuffled clumsily into her bedroom.

As she lay on the bed in her darkened room, the bunny could not stop her mind from wandering back to how her phone conversation, if it can be considered as one, with Risa ended. Something was definitely wrong. Slamming her fists on either side of her body, Sayumi pushed herself up with her elbows from her sleeping position and snapped on the ankle guard that the doctor had ordered her to wear for at least a week.

I won't be able to get any sleep tonight unless I'm certain Gaki-san is alright.

-----

"Ummm..."

Twisting and shifting herself nearer to the warm body she was lying on, Eri murmured softly as she breathed out heavily, evidently sleep talking as she slumbered.

"Eri feels so happy to be with Ai-chan."

Hearing the touching confession by her girlfriend, Ai chewed on her lower lip to stop herself from weeping. Eri was clearly that much in love with her that she even thought of her in her dreams.

Carefully tucking a stray strand of hair that had fallen across her face back behind her ear, Ai began to wipe with the back of her hand the tears which had started to fall from her eyes.

"I don't deserve your love Eri. Especially now when I can't even tell if you're the one."

Slightly later, Eri had roused from her sleep and urged Ai home. She felt bad for keeping the elder from receiving her own well deserved rest. It had been a hectic day for all of them not to mention the unbelievable drama which had played out right in the dance studio.
 
Despite Ai's claim that it was perfectly fine for her to stay the night, Eri was adamant that she leave. The turtle girl was a staunched believer that one's own bed was the best instrument for a good night's sleep.
 
-----

As Ai walked along the pavement leading away from Eri's apartment, her thoughts fleeted back to the various happenings which had taken place over the previous few days.


~Flashback~

"You will stay back to clean up after rehearsal."

"I expected better from you Gaki-san."

"It's best if you settle whatever problems you have with the kouhais before coming to work. This is the second time something has happened because of you."

~End of flashback~


In every memory that Ai had of Risa, it was obvious that her best friend’s brown eyes were filled with a sad sorrow which demonstrated how deeply hurt she must have been by her words.

"Was I too callous and unfeeling?"

Kicking a small pebble forwards with every step that she took, worry lines soon began to etch themselves onto Ai’s forehead. The Morning Musume leader deeply regretted speaking to her second in command so harshly. Before she knew it, she found herself in the vicinity of Risa's apartment. She must have unwittingly walked the short distance from Eri’s apartment here.
 
Lifting her gaze to the window on Risa's floor, Ai stared unmoving at the unlit glass panel until the screeching of tires from a car speeding pass broke her out of her reverie. Looking both ways as she stepped onto the tarred road, Ai jogged in the direction of the entry of the upper middle class apartment block. There was something she had to do tonight, there was someone she had to see.
 
"I'm so sorry for treating you this way."
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: Sukoshi on July 21, 2009, 11:02:41 AM
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooOoooooooooooooooooooo~   :on blackhole:

*ahem*

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"Michishige-san, I know it's not my place to say this but you should move on. Loving someone doesn't mean possessing them.

Sounds like junjun borrowed that line from a drama

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Sometimes just watching them from the shadows and seeing their happy smile is enough."

and added in some stalky stalky  :sweat:

now who could it be that JunJun likes....been too caught up in the intense gorokkie drama! :mon inluv:  lol would be seriously way too messed up if it was Kamei san  :sweat:  Probably Sayu or Reina...probably Reina...yeah that's gotta be it  :smhid

I should probably go back and check for hints but there's no room in my mind right now for Jun...I mean not after what just happened to R I S A !

now what the heck is with Risa and these darn pills?!   :scolding:  Did you give her a secret stash of suicide pills, HAMMY SAN?!    :frustrated:

...you know every time I try to reassure myself that you wouldn't kill off your favourite member...you do just that.  now what am I suppose to believe?!  

well at least thank kami sama that Sayu trusted her bunny senses!  (she probably tried to run Ai chan over with that speeding car while she was heading over...hehe j/k :P  obviously she'd be in a taxi  :sweat:)

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"Eri feels so happy to be with Ai-chan."

Oh Eririn...so cute, so adorable, so everything with sugar and spice...but you're breaking my kameshige heart!   :k-sad:

oh wait...back to R I S A.  Why if you killed her off...I'll....I'll....well I don't know what I would do.  yet.   :ding:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: DO Me DO Me on July 21, 2009, 12:47:02 PM
LoL Oh man...I just wanted to read the first chapter but ended up reading to the new chapter. And now it's almost 7am! XD I had to keep myself from LoLing on some parts so I wouldn't wake up anyone. But wow, those are some pairings I've never seen but they're interesting! Gorokkie drama ftw! I was wondering if 7th and 8th gen would get involve, they've just been watching this whole time thinking "our senpais are crazy!" But it looks like Junjun has someone in mind but I'm not sure yet. hehe Ok, I'm going to bed now. :P
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: ringo-hime on July 21, 2009, 01:34:14 PM
Ohhh...

Who does Jun likeeee?  :P

SO Gaki-san is dead?  :shocked

Damn, wish Sayu was fast enough to be there first. :]]]]]]]]]
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on July 21, 2009, 04:16:58 PM
*dances around* JunJun has a crush~~ JunJun has a cruuuush~~~ :lol: Oh no....Gaki's taking scary pills here too. :sweatdrop: And it's worse that she's like passed out now. :( Ai-chan is so confuzzled!! :grin: And poor Sayu, she cares a lot about Gaki and Ai-chan's kind of brushing it off. Eri won't know if you're gone, Ai-chan, she's sleeping. OOOH, I see why she couldn't leave...Eri was on her. XD Eri's so innocent and doesn't know all the problems everyone else is having. *gasps* Ai-chan's gonna find Gaki and all the pills (which I personally suspect are for depression) and feel even worse! :cry:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: ongakuSOUL on July 21, 2009, 08:40:09 PM
SHOKKU!! SHOKKU!!

Oh my, what on earth has Gaki been doing with those pills! D: If she dies again in ANOTHER fic of yours I swear I'll... GAHH!! :tama-mad:
and Sayu is going over there limping??? Oh no, no, no, no, we don't need an even more injured usa-chan and a dead green-loving princess!

Gosh, I feel so sad for Eri. She loves Ai-chan so much but Ai-chan herself isn't so sure about whether she feels the same about Eri. And Eri loves her so much!! :cry: She's gonna take it real hard when Ai-chan breaks up with her.

Anyway, I wonder who Junjun likes :roll: she dropped a major hint there with her words of wisdom XD It seemed kind of strange that she would mention that all of a sudden, so why there? maybe she likes *cough*sayu*cough*
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: Moogiley on July 22, 2009, 08:41:04 AM
I check back daily to see if this fic is updated! Love it so much, favorite current fic~
I'm gonna go with my instinct and say JunJun-->Sayu, and I liiiike it! JunSayu~
Also, hope Gaki-san is ok! Don't kill anyone off!!
And update soon please! :)
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: takagakifan on July 22, 2009, 11:04:10 PM
OH! :OMG: EM! :frustrated: EFFing! :scared: GEE! :on blackhole:

Gaki stop tryiing to kill yourself!!! :cry:

but does Jun Jun like Sayu? :? oh snaps that was unexpected lol JunSayu? JunShige? MichiJun? UsagiJun? hmmm.... ok then *shrugs*

I wonder will get to Risa first? *prays its Sayu*...er... i mean Ai takagaki ftw! *cough* GAKISHIGE!!! XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: .Mikoto on July 22, 2009, 11:41:58 PM
this is so confusing damn it  XD
I feel bad for Eri and Reina  :cry:
Jun-san has a Crush and I think the same the crush is on Sayu
I still feel bad for Reina... I don´t want her alone, and I don´t want TanaKame (just cuz I want Eri and Reina no-be couple right now  XD) Make ReiKa  :lol:
I wanna see what happens next
Update soon~~
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: JFC on July 23, 2009, 12:31:05 AM
Merry Go Round
Chapter 11


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Yelping in obvious pain with every step that she took, Sayumi leaned heavily on Jun Jun as the taller girl helped her over to the living room couch.
Awwwwwww...Junjun so helpful. :oops:



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"Michishige-san, I know it's not my place to say this but you should move on. Loving someone doesn't mean possessing them. Sometimes just watching them from the shadows and seeing their happy smile is enough."

Her little speech left Sayumi stunned in more ways than one. She hadn't expected any of the kouhais to come out in the open and talk about this topic let alone start giving her advice.
Whoa, unexpected for sure, though in some ways it isn't seeing as how even if she is technically a kouhai in the group, Junjun is older than Sayu.  Add the fact that she does indeed have a point about the "not possessing them" bit.



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After focusing her thoughts wholly on the 8th generation member and scrutinizing her daily behavior in her mind’s eye, it finally occurred to Sayumi the possible reason behind Jun Jun’s outburst.

Could Jun Jun be in love with one of the members?!
Dun dun duuuuuuuuun! :O



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Clutching at the sheets with trembling hands to pull herself slowly forward, she unintentionally knocked a couple of uncapped bottles off the bed. The white plastic containers fell to the floor and scattered their contents everywhere. The pills in various colors lay strewn about as Risa finally managed to clasp her phone.
Pills? Oshit.

Oh geez I hope that they were just aspirin or something that Reina gave Risa to help cope with the eventual hangover that she'd have after the previous night's boozing...somehow though, I still can't help but worry that it might be more than that.  :shocked:



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It wasn’t long before Sayumi realized that the sub-leader wasn’t answering her. Thinking that Risa wasn’t paying her any attention, Sayumi pouted even though there was no one around to see it.

“It really isn’t much fun speaking to yourself.”

Tilting her head and resting an elbow on the arm rest of the sofa, Sayumi waited for a reply. Instead of an answer in the form of words, a strange sound entered her ears. Sitting up in her seat unconsciously, Sayumi strained her hearing to recognize what the noise was.

“Gaki-san? Gaki-san what’s wrong?!”

However, Sayumi never got an answer as the line got cut off after a deafening thud…
Crap, I REALLY want to be wrong about this. :cry: :shocked



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Ai didn’t know how many hours had passed since Eri dozed off. She only knew the time she had spent watching Eri sleep had been both serene and confusing. After staring at Eri's sleeping face for the entire duration, she still didn’t know which category the love she felt for the turtle fell into or which direction she should be steering their relationship.

“The one I love is you…right?”
Poor Aichan...can't even figure out her own feelings. :(



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Before she could reconfirm her thoughts, the bulge in her jeans pocket quivered.
All of a sudden, I'm reminded of a perv fic that Flyp posted a few years back.  :nervous



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*SAYU CALLS AICHAN ABOUT RISA*
A calm, logical theory...as one would expect from leader. Still...can't seem to shake the feeling she's wrong.
:mon scare:



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Twisting and shifting herself nearer to the warm body she was lying on, Eri murmured softly as she breathed out heavily, evidently sleep talking as she slumbered.

"Eri feels so happy to be with Ai-chan."

Hearing the touching confession by her girlfriend, Ai chewed on her lower lip to stop herself from weeping. Eri was clearly that much in love with her that she even thought of her in her dreams.
As if Aichan wasn't in enough internal conflict, Eri's not exactly making things easier.  :-\



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*AICHAN ENDS UP AT RISA'S APARTMENT*
/me braces for major shokku.
:mon cute:



And where the fuck did Reina go anyway? :?
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: rndmnwierd on July 23, 2009, 08:15:38 AM
Omg have I really never commented on this story? It's totally awesome, a love parallelogram and many situations which aren't as they seem. Oh, I can't wait to read more.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on July 23, 2009, 07:57:12 PM
O_O JunSayu!? (Or JunEri...Though that's a lot of love for Eri...) And...and oh god, Risa. :cry: You better not have done anything serious to her again, Hammy!!! ><
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: adventwriter on July 25, 2009, 07:18:03 AM
I just read all of the previous chapters in the last couple of hours. Awesome story - I've wanted to smack Ai-chan for her callousness toward Gaki-san. Poor Junjun and Reina for having crushes on others. I definitely can't wait for the Ai-chan/Gaki-san encounter. The story could use a bit more Linlin.  :P
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: kRisZ on July 25, 2009, 04:30:41 PM
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The pills in various colors lay strewn about as Risa finally managed to clasp her phone....Sayumi waited for a reply. Instead of an answer in the form of words, a strange sound entered her ears....

 :shocked  she didn't take some of those right?


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I won't be able to get any sleep tonight unless I'm certain Gaki-san is alright.

a very caring friend  :wub:


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There was something she had to do tonight, there was someone she had to see.

be quick

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: Fenrir on July 29, 2009, 10:55:05 AM
Whoops! Missed two chapters there! Good thing I'm a fast reader and I really should be in bed right now. XD Oh well.

What's with all the Gaki killing or making Gaki all depressed lately? lol I do hope you didn't kill her off. XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: lil_hamz on August 26, 2009, 02:21:26 PM
MGR11

@Sukoshi-chan: LOL, your reaction was so funny. I won’t be killing anyone off yet in this fic so you can rest easy. And that quip about a killer bunny? Pure gold :lol:

@DO Me DO Me: Awww I’m so flattered that you would read through this fic. Hope you had a good sleep that night :oops:

@ringo-hime: Jun Jun eh…hmmm I ain’t telling who she likes yet. It’s a secret for now ;)

@SBK: Wow, I read your comment and imagined you rattling off. Did you manage to breath? Thanks so much though I appreciate it when you awesome readers tell me what you thought of the chapter :twothumbs

@ongakuSOUL: *Gasps*:shocked What will you do to me if Gaki-san does die? *scared* 

@Moogiley: ARIGATOU!!! :) I’m so honored that you like reading my fic so much. I’m sooooo sorry that I’m not a faster writer.

@takagakifan: That is a lot of nicknames for the JJShige pair. There should be a poll for the most popular one. Personally I like MichiJun. It just sounds so cute :D

@.Mikoto: ReiKa? Little Mitssui and Reina? :huhuh Hmmmm…*thinks*

@JFC: Is that perv fic that you’re talking about about someone being a guy? Was it Maki? I have a bad memory :P You know, the funny thing was I wondered if anyone would think along that line when I wrote it. Looks like you did.

@rndmnwierd: OMG!!! You’re here!! *glomps* I’m such a fan of your works :heart: And it’s great that you update so fast. I wish I was half as good as you.

@Shiichan: What counts as serious to you? XD

@adventwriter: Ahhh the lack of Lin Lin. I was intending to include more of the juniors but when I start writing, they just somehow don’t appear? :?

@kRisZ: Unfortunately, Risa did take those pills :( Not without reason though.

@Fenrir: Erm… cuz…I’m the infamous Gaki loving author who loves to make her suffer? :twisted:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 11 (21/07)
Post by: lil_hamz on August 26, 2009, 02:43:50 PM
Chapter 12


"You have GOT to be kidding me!"
 
Throwing her hands up in frustration, Sayumi glared at the small sheets of paper taped onto the doors of both elevators in lobby E.
Lift under maintenance. The management apologizes for any inconveniences caused.
 
Although she knew at the back of her mind that private condominium blocks carried out regular repairs on their lifts to ensure their smooth operation, Sayumi couldn’t help but grouch at her unbelievably bad luck. It was dreadful enough for someone like her with absolutely zero athletic talent to ascend nine stories with no mechanical help. The situation was made ten times worse when she had a liability in the form of an aching ankle.
 
Limping over to the doorway leading to the complex’s stairwell, Sayumi took a deep breath before pushing it open. This was going to be one long journey. She didn't know how many stories she had climbed or how much time had passed since she didn't have the habit of wearing a watch. Whenever she needed the time, she could simply ask Risa. Even though she could check the time on her cellphone, at this point, Sayumi was much too weary to undertake any additional movement. She just knew that the numbers representing Risa's apartment level had not yet flashed past her eyes.
 
"Somebody, KILL me NOW."
 
Moaning aloud whilst she panted heavily, Sayumi at last saw the figures which she had so greatly wished to glimpse. 9.
 
"Thank heavens. If I had to take one more step I would fling myself off the building this instant."
 
Dragging her throbbing ankle behind her, the Rokkie hobbled towards the unit situated at the furthest end. Beads of sweat trickled freely down the sides of her face, clamping the ends of her long dark hair together while her t-shirt was thoroughly soaked through from the perspiring. Despite her beauty, Sayumi was anything but a picture of gorgeousness at the moment. 
 
*Ding dong x 3*
 
"Gaki-san! Gaki-san!"
 
Giving up on the doorbell when she received no reply, Sayumi resorted to banging repeatedly on her senpai's apartment door like a crazed woman. It surprised her that none of the neighbors had come out of their homes to give her a verbal lashing. It was after all nearly 3 am in the morning.
 
"Sayu?"
 
Twirling around when she heard her name being called, Sayumi was astounded to see the identity of the owner of the voice.
 
"What are YOU doing here?"
 
The girls exclaimed at the same time with fingers pointing at each other and burst into amused giggles when the coincidence of it all sunk in.
 
"Didn't you say there was nothing to be worried about?"
 
By keeping her head lowered and pretending to be engrossed in searching for the set of keys hidden somewhere within her bag, Ai evaded Sayumi’s question successfully. Nevertheless, the older girl could feel her kouhai’s eyes boring into the top of her head and the intense pressure from the scrutiny made her feel extremely uneasy. Ai's reluctance to speak was not lost on the astute raven haired beauty and hence she decided to try for a more subtle approach.
 
“Did Gaki-san give you the key to her apartment?” 
 
“Erm…yeah…I kinda used to drop by quite frequently.”
 
Inserting the key into the lock and twisting it until she heard a familiar click, Ai grabbed onto the door knob and swung open the entry with a gentle push. Moving one hand along the wall, she located the light switch effortlessly and proceeded to flood the apartment with a brilliant white glow.
 
“You did come over a lot.”
 
Mumbling under her breath, Sayumi trailed behind Ai and entered Risa’s home. The first item she saw was a huge fluffy couch and the exhausted girl was extremely tempted to make a beeline for and flop down her worn out body. Nonetheless, Sayumi continued looking around for Risa’s room, wanting to make sure within the shortest time possible that she was alright.
 
“Is this Gaki-san’s bedroom?”
 
Walking in the direction of one of the doors, Sayumi peered through the crack in between the wall and partially opened door. The scene she saw next made her let out a horrified scream. Startled by the fear evident in her voice, Ai ran over to her straight away.
 
"Oh my god!"
 
-----
 
“Snap out of it Reina. It’s not worth crying Reina’s heart out for something that’s not meant to be.”
 
Sitting under the window sill of her darkened room, Reina hugged her knees tightly as she wept. Her family members must be asleep by now and she had to be careful not to rouse them with the noise she was making. Sniffing back the tears that were rolling down her cheeks, Reina dabbed at her swollen eyes with the piece of tissue paper she clutched in her hand.
 
~Flashback~

Her hand fumbled clumsily over the buttons on Risa's shirt. One, two...three...Just as she was about to tear the garment completely off, Reina heard a soft but distinct whisper. Transferring her gaze once again to Risa's mouth, Reina saw them move. The words which left those slightly parted lips made the younger freeze and cease all further action.

“I love you…Ai-chan.”
 
~End of flashback~
 
What happened earlier in Risa’s apartment kept replaying itself in Reina’s mind and no matter how hard she tried to block out the heartbreaking confession from her thoughts, those three words persisted in appearing.

“She will only love Ai, Reina will never stand a chance. Never...”
 
Despite knowing about Risa’s fondness for Ai, it still hurt to listen first hand to the love declaration which she yearned for but couldn’t have. She was head over heels in love with Risa, yet the object of her desire cherished another. Therefore when Risa uttered her innermost feelings in her drunken stupor audibly, Reina did the act of cowardice that she had always despised. She ran away.
 
Leaving Risa alone when she was so intoxicated wasn’t the best course of action. However, the twenty year old was too confused to think up a better plan at that moment. Before she fell in love, Reina had never experienced such helplessness. She didn't relish this feeling and she absolutely loathed how much her life was playing out like the plot from one of the many dramas she loved to watch.
 
Crawling on her hands and knees to her bag which had been thrown aside haphazardly upon entering her room, Reina dug for the box containing the one item which allowed her to forget about her troubles momentarily. Balancing a single stick between her lips, Reina lit the end of the cigarette with the orange flame atop her lighter. Then sucking in deeply, she leaned her head back against the wall to stare up at the ceiling covered with an array of dancing shadows cast by the street lamp perched outside her window. 
 
Reina does not want her.
She will be erased from Reina’s mind.
Niigaki Risa will be no longer mean anything to Reina.

 
-----
 
The air-conditioning in the waiting area was chilly. So icy cold that Ai shivered whenever the doors leading into the operating theatre swung open. A couple of harried looking nurses took turns scurrying pass, prolonging Ai's agony of not knowing what was going on inside. Wrapping her arms around her body to keep warm, the elder stood away from Sayumi who was pacing frantically along the opposite end of the corridor.
 
Her ankle throbbed from overexertion but Sayumi could not sit down even for a moment. She was too worried about Risa's condition. Closing her eyes and lowering her head, she muttered a silent prayer pleading for Risa’s safety. Risa couldn’t die, not when she was so young and still had her whole life ahead of her. On her part, Ai was rooted to her spot as she quietly repeated the following mantra.
 
“You have to pull through. You have to pull through...”
 
After what seemed like centuries, the red light above the door extinguished and the doctor emerged from the theatre.   
 
“Gaki-san is she…has she?”
 
Fearful of hearing an answer which she could not bear to acknowledge, Sayumi's voice quivered as she dashed to the doctor’s side.
 
“It looks to be a case of Ulcus Pepticum but more tests would have to be carried out to ascertain it.”
 
Noting Sayumi’s confused expression, the man went on to explain.
 
“Gastric ulcers develop when the stomach’s lining is injured either by drugs, alcohol, tobacco or caffeine. Has the patient been waking up from acute pain in the night?
 
Unaware about the occurrence of any such episodes, Sayumi glanced at Ai for a reply. Ai's reaction constituting of a blank stare demonstrated that she didn’t know anything about this either.
 
“What about the blood? There was so much of it.”
 
Shuddering at the memory of Risa lying on sheets splattered with the crimson fluid, Sayumi pressed on, afraid that something more serious could be at play.
 
“Vomiting up blood is possible with gastrointestinal bleeding.”
 
“Can we see her?”
 
Before the doctor could reply Ai’s question, a melodious ringtone wafted into the ears of the trio. Shooting her a displeased look, the doctor stated.
 
“Mobile phone usage is prohibited in this section of the hospital.”
 
-----
 
Due to the hospital’s strict regulations, Ai could not remain in the A&E department if she wanted to use her cell phone. As a result, she was unable to visit Risa immediately. Exiting the compound to pick up the call, a wave of guiltiness welled up within Ai when she connected the call.
 
“Ai-chan! Have you arrived home? I was so worried when you didn’t send me a text message.”
 
“I’m sorry for not informing you Eri. I was so tired that I fell asleep as soon as I got home.”
 
The words tumbled out of her mouth in a flash and Ai only realized what she had said after Eri had accepted her explanation and ended the call with a chirpy goodbye. 
 
For the second time that night, Ai stood dazed as the events of the night sunk in. Risa had been seriously ill for some time and she had not discovered it in spite of of her role as Risa’s best friend. She had also failed in her duty as leader of the group to ensure each and every one of the member’s wellbeing.

What's more, she had just lied to Eri about her whereabouts. Why had her mind done such a thing? Even though she hated to admit it, Ai had a nagging suspicion that she subconsciously been untrue to Eri all along.
 
“I lied to Eri. I lied to her for Gaki-san.”
 
 
 

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 12 (26/08)
Post by: rndmnwierd on August 26, 2009, 03:40:30 PM
*is glomped* You're a fan of my stories!? I'm a fan of your stories!! How can you say you're not as good as me when you're better?!

Okay, my reactions went like this: Lol Sayu, Gaki-san!?, aw  :cry: poor Reina, I truly understand the heartbreak she must be going through, Gaki-san?!!, and lastly,   :O Ai-chan! I knew it!

Oh man I can't wait for the next chapter, so much awesome drama, I hope Risa will be alright.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 12 (26/08)
Post by: adventwriter on August 27, 2009, 01:46:33 AM
Awesome chapter! Poor Reina - can't wait to find out what happens next with Ai-chan and Gaki-san, as well as Kame-chan.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 12 (26/08)
Post by: strawb3rrykream on August 27, 2009, 02:21:47 AM
YAY!! Update!!! :cow: I'll try to breathe when I comment this time. XD *shinkokyu~u*
LMAO at Sayu going up the stairs!!! :rofl: Must be pretty bad for her ankle though. OMG!!! Gaki.... :cry: :cry: :cry: It's the drugs, I know it. I hope she pulls through, she has to!!! Ooooh, Ai-chan lied to Eri again. *shakes head* This is messed up, you know? :D
Reina!!! Mou, stop smoking! And don't totally wipe Gaki out of your mind. :( I bet she'll feel bad once she finds out what happened. :sweatdrop:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 12 (26/08)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on August 27, 2009, 05:57:03 AM
Oh good GOD GAKI-SAN. :cry: HAMMY. HAMMY HOW COULD YOU DO THIS!? TO RISA NONETHELESS!? :( And Reina! God dammit girl, STOP SMOKING. AND NOW IT'S A TAKAGAKISAYU TRIANGLE AND ERI'S GONNA... I DON'T EVEN @(_^$#-ING KNOW, AND...AND...AND... -brain 'splodes-

x___x
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 12 (26/08)
Post by: Sukoshi on August 27, 2009, 11:32:45 AM
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"Somebody, KILL me NOW."

LOL NO!  Hammy, do NOT kill her!  XD

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"Thank heavens. If I had to take one more step I would fling myself off the building this instant."

NO! just NO! XD

you know Ai chan made it up to Risa's aparto level almost as fast as Sayu did.  I bet they finished fixing the lifts just when Ai chan arrived XD  

poor Reina  :mon waterworks:  She's gonna feel so guilty when she finds out about Gaki...I mean Hammy san here almost wiped her out of the story universe let along just Reina's mind!  But Reina doesn't know this yet so *sigh*  the poor thing...  :farofflook:

*breathes out the heavy air* :mon exhaust: omoi yo~  :badluck:

while everyone is shocked over Gaki san, I'm just so relieved you didn't kill her off!  I seriously can't complain about it this time!  Honest! XD

Oh but I see there's an important lesson to be learned here.  Don't do drugs and heavy drinking kiddies!  :mon geek:

When I get some free time I seriously gotta make a stats chart on how your characters end up  :mon evillaff:  Then I'm gonna say stuff like "OMG HAMMY, Risa only lives 26% of the time ya know!"  XD


oh btw..I've been had once again by ringo-hime!  Last time cause the first post I glimpsed at when loading the new chapter said Gaki's dead and this time too since the new chapter is on the same page XD  Man! the postie gets me every single time!  XD  
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 12 (26/08)
Post by: kRisZ on August 28, 2009, 07:31:18 PM
Poor Reina


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“You did come over a lot.”

 XD


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“You have to pull through. You have to pull through...”

 :prayers:


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“I lied to Eri. I lied to her for Gaki-san.”

 :huhuh
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 12 (26/08)
Post by: JFC on September 12, 2009, 02:30:11 AM
Chapter 12

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"You have GOT to be kidding me!"
 
Throwing her hands up in frustration, Sayumi glared at the small sheets of paper taped onto the doors of both elevators in lobby E.
Lift under maintenance. The management apologizes for any inconveniences caused.
Oh geez that sucks. Don't suppose they have one of those wheelchair lifts that can be attached to run along a regular stairwell? :(



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at this point, Sayumi was much too weary to undertake any additional movement. She just knew that the numbers representing Risa's apartment level had not yet flashed past her eyes.
Geez, Sayu really hoofed it all the way to Risa's to check on her! :O



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"Sayu?"
 
Twirling around when she heard her name being called, Sayumi was astounded to see the identity of the owner of the voice.
 
"What are YOU doing here?"
Aichan, right? :)



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“Did Gaki-san give you the key to her apartment?”
 
“Erm…yeah…I kinda used to drop by quite frequently.”
Well duh...best friends and what not.



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“Is this Gaki-san’s bedroom?”
 
Walking in the direction of one of the doors, Sayumi peered through the crack in between the wall and partially opened door. The scene she saw next made her let out a horrified scream. Startled by the fear evident in her voice, Ai ran over to her straight away.
 
"Oh my god!"
WHAT??? WHAT HAPPENED???

RISAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!
:OMG:



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What happened earlier in Risa’s apartment kept replaying itself in Reina’s mind and no matter how hard she tried to block out the heartbreaking confession from her thoughts, those three words persisted in appearing.

“She will only love Ai, Reina will never stand a chance. Never...”
I guess it was too much for her to take? She just had to get out of there. :cry:



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Crawling on her hands and knees to her bag which had been thrown aside haphazardly upon entering her room, Reina dug for the box containing the one item which allowed her to forget about her troubles momentarily. Balancing a single stick between her lips, Reina lit the end of the cigarette with the orange flame atop her lighter. Then sucking in deeply, she leaned her head back against the wall to stare up at the ceiling covered with an array of dancing shadows cast by the street lamp perched outside her window.
 
Reina does not want her.
She will be erased from Reina’s mind.
Niigaki Risa will be no longer mean anything to Reina.
Awwwwwwwwwww...Reina...noooooooooooooooooooo.  :'(



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Her ankle throbbed from overexertion but Sayumi could not sit down even for a moment. She was too worried about Risa's condition. Closing her eyes and lowering her head, she muttered a silent prayer pleading for Risa’s safety. Risa couldn’t die, not when she was so young and still had her whole life ahead of her. On her part, Ai was rooted to her spot as she quietly repeated the following mantra.
 
“You have to pull through. You have to pull through...”
Two different ways of expressing it, but we all know that they're both worrying about her right now.



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“Gaki-san is she…has she?”
 
Fearful of hearing an answer which she could not bear to acknowledge, Sayumi's voice quivered as she dashed to the doctor’s side.
 
“It looks to be a case of Ulcus Pepticum but more tests would have to be carried out to ascertain it.”
WTF, Risa has an ulcer??? :o

Is that why those bottles of pills were in her room? They're her medication?



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“Gastric ulcers develop when the stomach’s lining is injured either by drugs, alcohol, tobacco or caffeine. Has the patient been waking up from acute pain in the night?
 
Unaware about the occurrence of any such episodes, Sayumi glanced at Ai for a reply. Ai's reaction constituting of a blank stare demonstrated that she didn’t know anything about this either.
 
“What about the blood? There was so much of it.”
 
Shuddering at the memory of Risa lying on sheets splattered with the crimson fluid, Sayumi pressed on, afraid that something more serious could be at play.
 
“Vomiting up blood is possible with gastrointestinal bleeding.”
Oh shit, this is BAD! Why didn't Risa say anything?!? :shocked



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Due to the hospital’s strict regulations, Ai could not remain in the A&E department if she wanted to use her cell phone. As a result, she was unable to visit Risa immediately. Exiting the compound to pick up the call, a wave of guiltiness welled up within Ai when she connected the call.
 
“Ai-chan! Have you arrived home? I was so worried when you didn’t send me a text message.”
 
“I’m sorry for not informing you Eri. I was so tired that I fell asleep as soon as I got home.”
 
The words tumbled out of her mouth in a flash and Ai only realized what she had said after Eri had accepted her explanation and ended the call with a chirpy goodbye.
So Aichan just lied to Eri and didn't tell her that she really went to see Risa, and that now she and Sayu are at the hospital with her.



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she had just lied to Eri about her whereabouts. Why had her mind done such a thing? Even though she hated to admit it, Ai had a nagging suspicion that she subconsciously been untrue to Eri all along.
 
“I lied to Eri. I lied to her for Gaki-san.”
Aichan's really got to think about things and figure out what she really wants.



Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 12 (26/08)
Post by: lil_hamz on September 16, 2009, 02:21:02 PM
@rndmnwierd: I'm not better, YOU ARE! Risa should be fine. I don't think I'll be killing her off in this fic XD

@adventwriter: Are you rooting more for TakaGaki or AiEri? :P

@SBK: What does shinkokyu~u mean? :? I don't know why I'm feeling bad towards Reina and she doesn't even have it as bad as the other girls :D

@Shiichan: I don't think I'll stop calling you by this name. It somehow just fits? What do I have to do to put your brain back together? :shocked: I can't have it in pieces cuz I wanna read more of your fics.

@Sukoshi-chan:n LOL, don't worry, I won't kill Sayu...I think XD If you do come up with that list I'll definitely be reading it :D

@kRisZ: Did this chapter manage to create an impact for you? I hope it did ;)

@JFC: Yep, Risa was actually taking those pills for the pain. So nope, she wasn't thinking of killing herself :(
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 12 (26/08)
Post by: lil_hamz on September 22, 2009, 02:12:30 PM
I took too long on this but it's finally done.

The trailer for Merry go Round!

[noembed]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rdLZfvIXE9I[/noembed]
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Trailer (22/09)
Post by: Estrea on September 22, 2009, 04:12:11 PM
^Isn't that song in the background one of those that you took from me? :lol:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Trailer (22/09)
Post by: rndmnwierd on September 22, 2009, 04:29:14 PM
I like it! Makes me wanna read a new chapter! *hint hint nudge nudge wink wink*
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Trailer (22/09)
Post by: cogi_yoshi on September 22, 2009, 06:07:27 PM
cute trailer! and that Yuna itou song really fits the scene....I can't wait for the next chapter... :love:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Trailer (22/09)
Post by: Sukoshi on September 23, 2009, 04:28:44 AM
Ooo~  trailer! trailer!   :shy2:

You know I love every video you make and this is no exception  :oops:

I hope you make trailers for your other fics too~ and of course write more Merry Go Round~ ! (hehe I actually made a trailer for one of your fics before...but that's a secret no one knows about...ugh...did I type that out loud??  erm...must use smaller font! *looks away* *shifty eye* *shifty eye*)

motto Merry go Round~ hoshi~  :mon innocent:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Trailer (22/09)
Post by: lil_hamz on December 04, 2009, 06:39:46 PM
@Essy: Yup yup. I really like the song :)

@rnd & cogi: I hope it's ok to call you like this. New chapter up! :D

@Sukoshi-chan: I love your trailers even more!! :wub: EHHHH?!?!? You made a trailer for my fic? Can I see? Pretty please? :P

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 13


"You're crazy."

"And you're insane."

The two girls said to each other as they sat in the backseat of a taxi headed for the Niigaki household.

"Why did you insist on getting discharged when you should be getting a thorough check-up instead?"

The taller exclaimed, somewhat annoyed that her repeated advice fell on deaf ears.

"Why take up a bed space when I already know what's wrong? The gastric is an old ailment."

"Oh yeah? Then how come none of the members knew anything about it? Not even Ai-chan."

Folding her arms across her chest, Michishige Sayumi demanded, all the time not taking her eyes off her sub-leader.

"Don't tell Ai-chan about this."

"Why?"

Although Sayumi had expected Risa to make this request, she still wanted to know the reason behind it.

"She has a lot of things to think about. I don't want to burden her more with unimportant issues."

Gazing down at her hands which were placed on her lap, the older girl explained. Her rationalization sounded logical and Sayumi would have believed it if not for a similar incident which took place about forty minutes ago.


~Flashback~

"Baka, baka, baka."

"Why are you singing Onna ni Sachi Are?"

Noticing that her eyes had slowly fluttered open, an anxious Sayumi leaned nearer to peer at the patient lying on the bed.
 
"How are you feeling?"

"I've been better."

Struggling to sit up, Risa accepted the bunny's help as her kouhai fluffed up the pillows and positioned them behind her.

"I can't believe you can still tsukkomi others in this state."

"Well, you were going on and on about Bakas."

Giving her a playful grin, Risa nudged the raven haired beauty who had come to sit on the bed beside her.

"I was referring to how stupid you were. God knows what would have happened if I didn't find you in time."

In the second she made that declaration, Sayumi realized she had forgotten to include Ai in the sentence. Ai had been there the entire time. It wasn't as it she had rescued Risa solely by herself. Just as she was about to amend her previous statement, Risa cut her off with a plead.

"Could you ask the doctor to please release me? I can't stand staying in the hospital."

Despite Sayumi's attempts to alter her decision, Risa stubbornness left Sayumi no choice but to agree. If they continued the dispute over this matter, Risa was most probably going to leave the ward and find the doctor herself. As soon as Sayumi she exited the ward, she was ambushed and yanked to a corner by Ai who had apparently been standing outside all this time.

"How is she?"

"Why don't you go in and find out? I'm sure Gaki-san would be glad to see you."

"Don't tell her I was here? Thanks Sayumi. I'll see you tomorrow."

And with that, Ai scooted off without waiting for a reply. Clearly Sayumi had now been assigned with the task of escorting home. Not that she minded since she had already intended to volunteer her services. There was no way she was leaving someone who had just been admitted into the hospital on her own. What if something happened along the way home?

~End of Flashback~


"Oi Sayumin! Stop dreaming, we're here."

Waving a hand in front of her face, Risa jolted Sayumi from her daydream before fishing out some yen to pay the cab driver.

While the duo waited for the lift, it suddenly occurred to Risa that if she was in her bedroom when she passed out from the pain, how exactly did Sayumi find her? Turning slightly to the right to face her companion, she enquired.

"Ano...Sayumin, how did you get into my house without a key?"

The question startled the limping girl for some moments before she regained her composure. It was a good thing she had managed to not blurt out the first thought that surfaced in her mind.

Ai-chan has your keys baka.

But since she couldn't reveal that fact after Ai's request, Sayumi had to find some way to wiggle out of answering that query truthfully.

"Hey! Why am I insane? Shouldn't you say I'm kind and gentle for accompanying you through the night?"

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"Ai-chan.."

She didn't expect that someone would reach the dance studio as early as she did. Hence when Ai heard her name being called, she whirled around immediately. As soon as she did, she found not only a person staring back at her, but a stalk of flower peeking out of the early arrival's hand. Flabbergasted by the pleasant surprise, Ai could only gape in shock.

"Eri.."

"I passed by the flower shop on the way here. I thought you might like it. Do you?"

The blush on her face was an obvious sign that Eri was feeling very embarrassed about her actions. So much so that she didn't dare look directly into her girlfriend's eyes.

"I love it. Thank you Eri."

Not knowing what to say in reply to Eri's touching gesture, Ai wordlessly pulled her into a tight embrace. As they stood in the middle of the empty dance studio, Ai rested her head on Eri's shoulder to hide the tears that had started to flow down her cheeks.

I must never hurt the pure and innocent you.

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The song of a Korean boy band filled the quiet room as the cell phone laying on the dresser began to vibrate. When she saw the name of the caller appear on the lit up screen, Reina contemplated several seconds about whether she should connect the line.

"Yes Sayu?"

"I'm sincerely inviting you for an all expense trip to DisneySea."

The information took some time to register itself in Reina's mind. When she finally understood the abrupt invitation, she decided to decline it.

"DisneySea? I'm sorry Sayu but that's not really my thing."

"Are you bearing a grudge against me? I didn't mean to go after you like that the last time. I think I'm really insane like what Gaki-san has said."

The mere mention of her name made Reina freeze and she almost dropped the phone she was clasping in her hand.

"I was at fault too."

"So we're good? We Rokkies are still one?"

The hopeful affirmation sounded so desperate that Reina couldn't help but laugh. Proud by nature, she couldn't bring herself to apologize for her own boorish actions. Nevertheless, she couldn't deny the fact that Sayumi was a good friend. Someone too precious to lose over a stupid argument.
  
"Definitely."

"Great! Are you sure you don't wanna come with me? It'll be fun."

Making a last ditch attempt to obtain some company for the entry tickets she already bought for the popular attraction, Sayumi tried once more to convince Reina. Unfortunately, the yankii was adamant to give the trip a miss. She wasn't really into watching parades or buying Mickey Mouse and such related merchandise.

After hanging up the phone with her fellow generation member, Reina flopped backwards onto her bed and tugged the blanket absentmindedly over herself.

"What is it going to take for me to forget her?"
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 13 (05/12)
Post by: cogi_yoshi on December 04, 2009, 08:20:16 PM
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"Don't tell Ai-chan about this."
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"Don't tell her I was here? Thanks Sayumi. I'll see you tomorrow."

The feeling is mutual... :grin:

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"Baka, baka, baka."

"Why are you singing Onna ni Sachi Are?"

some funny punch lines in a dramatic situation.. :mon lmao:

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The song of a Korean boy band filled the quiet room as the cell phone laying on the dresser began to vibrate.
Tohoshinki...forgot the song but Reina likes them... :mon determined:

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"What is it going to take for me to forget her?"
Reina..GANBARE!!!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 13 (05/12)
Post by: rndmnwierd on December 04, 2009, 09:26:04 PM
Holy crap you updated!! Honestly, I had nearly forgotten about this story, so I'm glad you came back. :lol: :lol:

Ah, the flies are all caught in the tangled web. I wonder which is the spider?
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"Don't tell her I was here? Thanks Sayumi. I'll see you tomorrow."
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I must never hurt the pure and innocent you.
Could it be Ai, torn between two amazing women?

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"Don't tell Ai-chan about this."
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Giving her a playful grin, Risa nudged the raven haired beauty who had come to sit on the bed beside her.
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"What is it going to take for me to forget her?"
Or Risa, who's unwittingly caught between three?

Don't take so long to update next time, dear. I love this story.

Oh, actually, you know what I reread the other day? The Lines Are Blurred. When I read it the first time, way back when, I wasn't a big fan of the gorokkies, so it was refreshing to read it with a new set of eyes, so to speak.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 13 (05/12)
Post by: kRisZ on December 05, 2009, 06:08:37 AM
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"Don't tell Ai-chan about this."

Hmmm


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"How is she?"

"Why don't you go in and find out? I'm sure Gaki-san would be glad to see you."

"Don't tell her I was here? Thanks Sayumi. I'll see you tomorrow."

Again, hmmm


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I must never hurt the pure and innocent you.

Aww  :(


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"What is it going to take for me to forget her?"

Go to disneysea  :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 13 (05/12)
Post by: Estrea on December 05, 2009, 10:42:59 AM
I have a small confession to make.

When I saw mention of a taxi in the opening paragraphs, I had a minor panic attack over whether we were going to have another Hammy moment. Hehe. Look what you have done! I'll never be able to view a taxi in your story normally. lmao
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 13 (05/12)
Post by: amEthystx on December 05, 2009, 11:16:34 AM
Hello~ I have a confession to make too... I read this story about a month or 2 back but had yet to comment~ was waiting for the next update to start commenting cause i did not know where to start~~ SO it's starting from now~   :kneelbow:

Forgive me? *Mega Bright Smile!*


Seriously...this story is going to be a big big drama? LOL~

As much as i love TakaGaki~ I was thinking how cute SayuGaki is too... but then again.. there is TanaGaki~.... TakaKame too..... Can i have all??? *Brighter Mega Smile* Did i forgot some1 else? I think there is still Jun and Lin~ but we dunno who they like yet rite?


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"Don't tell her I was here? Thanks Sayumi. I'll see you tomorrow."
- Looks like actually Ai-chan knows Gaki-san more than she shows it to her~

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I must never hurt the pure and innocent you.
- Doing it out of guilt will only worsen things~  :(

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"What is it going to take for me to forget her?"
-> thats the reason why she does not wanna go disney i guess~

What will happens when she finds out that Gaki-san got into the hospital when she left her unattended after all the drinking  :(


LOL~ i suddenly got this image of you.. as the operator of the Merry-Go-Round.. with an evil face.. and upping the speed of the thing to max~ Let's see who is flying out first!



 :mon bat:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 13 (05/12)
Post by: badsaints on December 05, 2009, 02:03:56 PM
Ai has started to realise her feelings for Risa, hasn't she? That Risa is more than just a best friend, that best friends can fall in love :O But she's afraid to affirm her feelings as she's afraid to face the issue and also to hurt Eri :cry: But she's gonna everyone in the end if she won't handle the matter delicately

No matter how she's in pain, Risa cares more for others than herself. Such an angel, is she? :wub: Wonder how Sayumin and Reina gonna take it from there XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 13 (05/12)
Post by: Sukoshi on December 10, 2009, 12:17:53 PM
@Sukoshi-chan: I love your trailers even more!! :wub: EHHHH?!?!? You made a trailer for my fic? Can I see? Pretty please? :P

hehe thank you very much :wub:  chotto hazukashii~  :mon sweat:  Time to dig around for it!  *hours later*
lol originally created June 30, 2008  XD  don't know if I'm allowed to publish it so best pm you XD

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Yay! more Merry Go Round!!!!!  :mon inluv:

hehe I had to think to myself about where we left off in the story....but then the opening paragraph reminded me right away.  Yes...you were half way to killing Gaki san off last chapter...and then you stuffed her in a taxi this chapter!  soo not for the faint at heart!   :mon scare:

This whole don't tell Ai chan, don't tell Risa thing....omg!  Sayu!  If the girl has watched any romantic dramas at all, she'd know that can't be a good thing!  That's what she gets for only watching scary-detective-mystery stuff *shakes head*  :gmon no:

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"Eri.."  I must never hurt the pure and innocent you.

*shakes fist* :grr:   A little late for that don't you think Ai chan?  *mutters something about poor innocent Eri and then looks at Hammy san*  I hope you don't hurt Eri too badly...she needs a happy ending!  I mean you owe her for GA right?   :mon whimper:  (lol the guilt tactic so isn't working, is it?  XD)



Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 13 (05/12)
Post by: kuro808 on December 12, 2009, 02:57:36 AM
wow 13 in one sitting lol gomen for not reading it earlier :(

this story has a lot of different pairings and it seems not that hard to follow, its very smooth, but alot of hurt people mentally and physically, i wish that all don't get into a melee
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 13 (05/12)
Post by: lil_hamz on February 05, 2010, 01:12:26 PM
@cogi_yoshi: Isn't it funny that Risa is the Korean fan yet Reina is more into Kpop :D

@rnd: Yup, unfortunately Ai is caught between 2 amazing women. Should she be considered lucky? TLAB was pretty badly written. Not to say I've improved much since then :oops:

@kRisZ: It wasn't Reina who went to Disneysea :P

@Estrea: It's just that a taxi is easier to get involved in an accident than a train XD

@Ame: I never seem to be able to get around to writing about the 8kkies. I really should change that. I would next make the girls fly out of the MGR. Unless they were flying towards me :lol:

@badsaints: No matter what Ai does she's gonna end up hurting people. Damn, that's the worst role to play :cry:

@Sukoshi-chan: Well, Ai is trying her best to make up to Eri. I wonder if it's gonna work :?

@kuro-san: I hope you don't mind me calling you that :) Thanks for reading this and gomen for hurting so many people. I can’t help it.

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 14
 
"I don't get it. YOU invited me, why am I the one paying for everything?"

Grumbling to a beaming Sayumi as she pulled out bills from her purse and counted them before handing the money over to the cashier, Risa sighed when the victorious bunny jerked on her elbow and guided the way out of the theme restaurant.

"The senpai is supposed to pay. It's how things work!"

Not convinced by the weak evidence presented to her, Risa could only roll her eyes helplessly. There was no point arguing with her kouhai. Sayumi could be annoyingly stubborn when she wanted to be and the resigned sub-leader didn't feel up to having a long drawn argument. She'll let it slide...this time. All of a sudden, the beanheaded young woman was reminded of another stubborn lady.

~Flashback~

"But I want to do this!"

Stomping her feet childishly, the older announced, acting like a small whiny child when her actual age was far from one.

"We're already running late. We might miss the last train if we delay any longer."

Checking the time on her watch repeatedly, the more mature of the two explained, trying her best to convince her companion that they shouldn't disrupt their original plan.

"Then you can leave. I'm going up the hill. With or without you!"

And with that, she began her ascend, increasing her strides with a determined pout on her face. There was no way she could leave her on her own. What's more she was climbing some isolated hill in an unfamiliar part of the area. What if she got lost or worse, hurt when night fell? Cursing under her breath at the agency for not providing transport to the various prefectures when Morning Musume had a concert, Risa jogged to catch up with the stalking girl.

"Ai-chan wait up! I'm coming with you."

~End of flashback~

"All that just to watch the sun set."

Mumbling her thoughts out wistfully, Risa completely forgot that she wasn't with a certain monkey-like woman but was with her bunny group mate.

"Gaki-san!"

"Huh?"

Her eyes refocused back on the taller dark haired young lady standing before her who was presently waving her hands in front of her face and it was only then when Risa realized she had been daydreaming.

"Sorry. I got a little distracted."

Noting the sudden awkward atmosphere, Risa bumped Sayumi with her shoulder.

"Didn't you want me to show you the parade? Well, let's go!"

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The line of bright, dazzling floats drove leisurely down the avenue as hordes of tourists and visitors lined up neatly on the two sides in wait of the oncoming visual spectacular in awe. The delightful music, energetic dancing and colorful display enthralled all who were watching the incredible show. Not satisfied with the view she was getting as it was obstructed by several heads complete with bushy hairdos, Risa glanced to her right to see if Sayumi shared her plight. Surely enough, she was bouncing up and down, trying to rise above the annoying heads.

"Come on."

What happened in the moment immediately after was a blur to Sayumi as she allowed her sub-leader to pull her forwards, directly into the path of the oncoming procession.

"Isn't the view from this angle much better?"

I can show you the world
Shining, shimmering, splendid
Tell me, princess, now when did
You last let your heart decide?

Risa didn't wait for Sayumi to reply and she tugged her along again, this time in between two rumbling floats. One had Cinderella and her prince dancing gracefully on it while the other featured Snow White and the 7 dwarfs.

Although the float starring Aladdin had not yet arrived, Sayumi could hear its familiar tune wafting in from the distance. Tightening her grip on Sayumi's hand, Risa began weaving in and out of the numerous dancers in the parade. Many of whom had bewildered expressions on their faces at seeing a pair of young women running in between the moving floats.

I can open your eyes
Take you wonder by wonder
Over, sideways and under
On a magic carpet ride

As though their actions coincided with the song lyrics, they ducked under the low hanging portion of a random float. These magnificent twirling creations with their vibrant colors and intricate designs were fully worthy of being called wonders and being able to see them at such close range was something Sayumi never imagined herself to be doing.

Amazingly, none of the theme park’s workers caught up with them nor did anyone reprimand their behavior throughout their unbelievable experience.

A whole new world
A new fantastic point of view
No one to tell us no
Or where to go
Or say we're only dreaming

As she felt the wind blow through her hair, Sayumi smiled at sensing the millions of stars sprinkled across the night sky. Then she did something she thought she’ll never do outside of karaoke bars. She sang.

“A whole new world
A dazzling place I never knew
But when I'm way up here
It's crystal clear
that now I'm in a whole new world with… you.”

Hearing Sayumi sing so boldly, the normally level headed second oldest member of Hello! Project's flagship group joined in enthusiastically.

“Now I'm in a whole new world with you.
Unbelievable sights
Indescribable feeling
Soaring, tumbling, freewheeling
Through an endless diamond sky

When they were at the end of the line, Risa turned backwards with her hand still linked to Sayumi's. Grinning at her for a moment, she proceeded to climb on the last float, dragging the stunned younger with her.

"Gaki-san! This isn't allowed!"

Not wavering in her climb, Risa only stopped when she reached the top of the beautifully decorated craft. Spreading her free hand outwards, she motioned for Sayumi to look.

A whole new world
Don't you dare close your eyes
A hundred thousand things to see
Hold your breath - it gets better
I'm like a shooting star
I've come so far
I can't go back to where I used to be
A whole new world
Every turn a surprise
With new horizons to pursue
Every moment red-letter
I'll chase them anywhere
There's time to spare
Let me share this whole new world with you

Turning to face Risa, Sayumi snaked her arm around her college’s waist and leaned in until their bodies fitted perfectly against each other’s contours.

"A whole new world
That's where we'll be
A thrilling chase
A wondrous place
For you and me."

Sayumi finished the song on her own and when she was sure a pair of brown eyes was gazing back at her, she took the initiative to plant a kiss on those plush, enticing lips.

“Thank you for tonight Gaki-san. I‘ll never forget this.”

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*bump*

The noise created was soft. Nevertheless, Reina managed to pick up the faint thud. Pausing in the midst of packing her make-up pouch, she replaced the small bag on the spot where she had first retrieved it. Proceeding to creep quietly towards the source of the sound and then placing one hand on the handle, the yankii swung it open in one swift move.

"WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE?"

The crouching figure trembled when she heard the tremendous bellow. If there was a moment in time when she wished she could turn invisible, this was it.

"Tanaka-san...I'm searching... for my contact lens!"

"You don't wear contact lens."

Mentally smacking herself on the forehead, a habit that one of her seniors was prone to exhibiting, Aika gulped. Her current situation was definitely not good. She had been caught red handed and it appeared that she would have no way of getting out of it unless she spoke the truth. Why in the world had she not come up with a better excuse beforehand?

"Tanaka-san...I...I...Niigaki-san...."

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"Ai-chan! Thank you!"

Her eyes sparkled and shone with happiness whilst Eri clasped her hands together, gazing fondly at the arrangement laid out on the table. In spite of the candles attached to a gleaming candlestick holder placed on a fancy tablecloth, wine glasses and polished cutlery, the food prepared was simple. It was neither steak nor foie gras.

"Ummm, it's delicious!"

"It's only omelette fried rice Eri."

Ai’s original intention was to prepare a delicious meal for her deserving girlfriend who never complained when the twenty-three year old didn't have time to accompany her. Unfortunately, while she was cooking dinner, a past memory surfaced in her mind.

~Flashback~

“When are you going to teach me how to make your famous omelette rice?”

It was a lazy Saturday afternoon, one of the rare times when both leaders of the group had a day off.

“What about right now?”

“Now?”

Shifting slightly in her horizontal position of lounging next to Ai on the sofa, Risa cracked open one eye, looking up at the owner of the apartment who was currently returning her glance.

“Yes now. Get up you lazy butt!”

Rolling off the couch, Ai took the opportunity to smack Risa’s behind before pulling a mischievous face at the somewhat confused figure.

“Last one into the kitchen does the dishes!”

~End of flashback~

“Did I say something amusing?”

“Wh--at?”

“You were smiling.”

Realizing that she had allowed her thoughts to drift away from her date with Eri, Ai apologized. Her admission of guilt comprising much more than what she let on.

“I‘m really, really sorry.”

From her position across Eri at the table they were seated at, Ai stared, taking in every detail of her partner’s face. She should be thankful someone as good as Eri would want to be with her. How could she think of another woman in her presence? Especially when Risa was a good friend to both of them. None of them would emerge unscathed should she mess up this complicated state of affairs.

Before she agreed to enter a relationship with Eri, Ai never anticipated that the dynamics of Morning Musume would change so drastically. Risa no longer hung out with her and was often seen with Sayumi. She missed her. She wanted to see Risa’s smile again, to feel her breath on her skin when she stood too close and smell the sweet scent of her hair or perfume. Even Reina was acting strangely in the recent days. What was wrong with everyone?

Shaking her head to clear the chaos that had erupted inside her head, Ai sighed. There was no point is seeking the answer behind her yearning for Risa. Eri was the one she was with now and she would not, could not hurt her. Pursing her lips into a thin line, Ai declared with surprising resolve.

“Move in with me Eri. Let‘s live together.”
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 14 (10-02-05)
Post by: ShikyoxYaiba on February 05, 2010, 06:37:42 PM
o__o A-Ai-chan!? That's not such a smart move, yah!? If...if something happens, this'll just be MORE heartbreaking for little Eri! D: Oh Eri... I wish she'd actually do something in this fic. :sweatdrop:

Aww at GakiShige and Ooooooh shit Aika, having Reina get you CAN'T be a good thing. @__@

Hoorah for updates! Imma try to write today too. No school, no homework... XD (Well, minus driver's ed, which I have to power through...)
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 14 (10-02-05)
Post by: kuro808 on February 05, 2010, 07:49:46 PM
As sson as I read the first line I knew it was the song,  :lol: yeah that makes a hwole lot of sense :rofl:

the Ai/Eri part though is rather chilling, but it has been a great story so far keep it up
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 14 (10-02-05)
Post by: amEthystx on February 06, 2010, 05:07:43 AM
:D

*melts*

Indeed.... GakiShige is a Whole New World  ;)

Been such a long time since i listen to this song again... Makes me wanna head down right to the CD store to grab a piece of those Disney Classic Collections. >.<

The whole sneaking around the parade thing is just so dreamy and exciting! Reminds me some sort of a very romantic Korean-feel setting..XD I shall try that someday with someone... :)

A very lost bunny being pulled along in the dancing crowd  by a cute rebellious bean...hmmmM~ XD

I guess the bunny never knew her usual responsible sub-leader had that in her.. but i think it's great to derail from the serious life once in awhile to do something really crazy plus with someone that hesitates and tries to stop you, the more you feel like getting into trouble! XD  Anyway.. It will be something to laugh about later on~

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“Move in with me Eri. Let‘s live together.”
- *sighs* I might turn into an old lady if i start..... :(

 :mon bat:

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 14 (10-02-05)
Post by: amEthystx on February 06, 2010, 05:12:46 AM
Me Singing A Whole New World Disney's Aladdin Nick Pitera (Cover) (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=t9-CS2v8wcc#)

OMG! Sorry! I just have to post this! I was Youtube-ing for the song and i happens to see this... It's amazing..~ Especially the Girl part... >.<

*Floats away*

EDIT: Page 9 GETZ!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 14 (10-02-05)
Post by: Sukoshi on February 06, 2010, 01:57:40 PM
awww  :gmon tears:  the sunset part made me want to sniffle a little  *darn you sentimental flashbacks!*   :farofflook:  but no!  I'm saving all snifflies for when..you know..you kill one of them off  :sweat:

whew!  I thought for sure you were gonna make Gaki san banned from DisneySea for life!  thank god for lazy workers XD

and what the heck did Ai chan say at the end?!   Has she never heard of the expression "making matters worse" ?!  *shakes head*

I love how you always throw in something jaw dropping at the end XD

Very sweet chapter!  chu~  :gmon heartu:

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 14 (10-02-05)
Post by: badsaints on February 06, 2010, 06:34:02 PM
Gosh this is one fic I don't want TakaGaki to be together :angry: Gaki is too good for Ai and Sayu deserve her better :( But Reina likes Gaki too (poor Yankii :()

Oooh I love the Disney shenanigans. It's kinda...romantic :wub: Somehow you've made their actions fit the lyrics of the song. And the kiss at the end just tops it all :wub:

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"Tanaka-san...I...I...Niigaki-san...."
This doesn't sound good :smhid Why do I get the feeling ya gonna do something to the bean? :lol:

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“Move in with me Eri. Let‘s live together.”
I feel sorry for the turtle. She's the innocent party in this mess Ai got herself into


@ Baby Sticky:  :shocked @ the vidz. Is that really that guy singing the girl part?
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 14 (10-02-05)
Post by: amEthystx on February 07, 2010, 04:47:23 PM
^  XD yes~ He sang both parts... he did it live on ellen's show before too..  I was like  :shocked too when i watch it at first  :D

@ Hammy: I have been singing the song for the whole 2 days ever since reading this XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 14 (10-02-05)
Post by: kRisZ on February 07, 2010, 05:40:11 PM
Sayu-Risa's actions at the parade was cute  :inlove:

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“Move in with me Eri. Let‘s live together.”
:mon freeze: NoOo  :shocked
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: lil_hamz on February 19, 2010, 01:00:00 PM
@Shiichan: Gomen about the lack of Eri. The previous chapter got a little long so I cut it off her section :nervous

@Kuro-san: Is it ok to call you this? Chilling? I never thought I’ll see that as a description for their relationship :D but it’s a good POV

@Sticky: You asked to be called this instead right? So there you go  :D Did you grab that CD in the end? Ooooh? Who are you gonna try that stunt with? And woah at that vid you put up. That guy does sound very much like a girl.

@Sukoshi-chan: Who said anything about killing people off? I might decide to be good for once ;)

@Badsaints: *Gasps* You don’t want a TakaGaki??? What is the world coming to :panic:

@kRisZ: Looks like I managed to achieve the shock effect with that last line :)

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 15
 
The room was dark and quiet with only the low sounds of steady breathing. Although I knew you weren't a light sleeper, I still didn't dark to shift too much in case you woke up. I didn't want you to discover that I was weeping. Crying over how I knew you didn't feel the same for me.
 
I was the well known aho of the group, the crazy, forgetful, clumsy and flippant member. However, in spite of all these undesirable traits, I knew there was one thing that I excelled over all the others. It was my heart. It was forgiving, caring and sensitivity.

I never told anyone, not even Sayumi. But I knew that you were drifting further and further away from me with each passing day. Clearly, you had accepted my love without realizing your true feelings of affection for another.
 
My heart isn't blind Ai-chan. I know the one you love is Gaki-san. And I love her dearly too. But only as a friend.
 
Yet fate likes to work in mysterious ways and on most occasions, seems to relish tormenting people. I don't know when or how but I fell hard for you. And no matter how I tried, I couldn't not have you by my side. That was why I confessed my love. I didn't have high hopes that you would reciprocate.

When you agreed to go out with me, to become my girlfriend, my heart leap with immense joy. I couldn't believe it was real. And maybe I shouldn't have. Then perhaps I wouldn't be in so much pain now. If only I hadn't started turning this wheel of complex relationships.
 
Slowly, I began to feel your nervousness whenever you were around me. The way you didn't dare look me in the eye and how you would tense up whenever I came too close. It hurt me to see you react like this and I would hide and cry myself to sleep every night.

I knew you would be happy again if I released you from this relationship that was causing you so much stress. Nevertheless, I couldn't bring myself to let you go, not after knowing how it feels to have you belong to me.  
 
Forgive me for being selfish Ai-chan. Forgive me for being cruel. But I will do everything I can, to keep you with me.
 
Closely my eyes and gradually falling asleep, I let my head loll near yours, feeling the comforting heat emitted from your light breathing. Snaking my arm around your well toned abs, I pulled you near and whispered in a pleading tone.
 
"Don't leave me Ai-chan. Never let me go."
 
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It was pretty late in the night and most of the streets were deserted. The only lights came from a convenience store located on the street opposite from where I was brisk walking. I must have looked rather comical with the lopsided grin plastered on my face. I wasn't really smiling to anyone in particular. I guess my vibrant beam was a consequence of the enjoyable time I had spent with Sayumi earlier.
 
Tucking my hands deep into my pockets as a chilly breeze blew past, I increased my speed to a slow jogged in the direction of home. The temperature had been falling steadily ever since I dropped Sayumi at her place and I couldn't wait to get home and jump into a hot tub filled with warm water for my daily bath.
 
Unexpectently, I saw a familiar figure waiting outside the front door of my apartment block as I approached the entrance. Surprised to see her so late in the night, I called out to her and waved.
 
"Tanakacchi, what are you doing here?"
 
Reina didn't reply my question, nor did she offer a greeting. Turning to face me with a stony gaze, she muttered.
 
"Did you send Aika to spy on me?"
 
It took a while for her accusation to sink in and when I realized what she had said, I started to speak, trying to explain the reason behind my actions.
 
"Listen Tanakacchi, it isn't what you think."
 
"What am I supposed to think?! You told a junior to spy on me! Is that what a sub-leader should be doing? Is that what a friend should be doing?!"
 
Putting my hands up to calm Reina down, I shook my head frantically.
 
"I didn't tell her to spy! I told her to keep an eye on you. And let me know if you ran into some trouble."
 
"And that's not spying?!"
 
Glaring me in a manner I have never seen her exhibit, Reina stared at me with so much hatred that I could almost feel the impact of it hitting me, ramming into my chest and making it difficult to breath.
 
I couldn't handle this on my own Tanakacchi. I couldn't ask Ai-chan because knowing her, she'll think it's better for management to handle this. But I didn't want to jeopardize the current situation. I wanted to see if I could get you to stop your smoking addition first. I knew Aika could be trusted. She was a smart kid, and she adored you too much to tell on you.
 
Despite the numerous logical explanations running though my mind, I couldn't articulate a single one of them. Standing helplessly in front of the seething you, my mouth opened and closed like a fish and I was for once, rendered speechless.
 
Seeing my lack of a response, you retorted bitterly.
 
"Why the silence sub-leader, cat got your tongue?"
 
Laughing at the irony of your words with tears welling up in your eyes, you continued.
 
"I never knew you thought so little of me. You couldn't be bothered to ask me if you wanted to know something? Getting Aika to do the leg work... You're too low!"
 
Throwing down that heartless sentence, you spun around without looking back and marched off. As your retreating back grew smaller, my brain finally decided to kick in and I pulled my feet off the pavement, sprinting after you.
 
"Tanakacchi!"
 
I grabbed your arm and whirled you around to face me. On reflex, you raised one hand and slapped me across the face. The force of it snapped my head sideways and I could taste blood in my mouth. You appeared shocked when she saw the trickle of red drip from the corner of my lip. Nevertheless, you didn't stop struggling to wriggle out of my grasp.
 
Feeling you gradually slip away, I realized I had to do something right now or you would probably never give me the opportunity to speak to you again. Such was the strength of your character. Using all of my strength, I pushed the smaller you backwards until you were trapped between me and the wall of my condo.
 
"God just listen to me for once Tanakacchi! I know about your smoking. But I'm too crap to solve this by myself. That's why I roped Aika in to help. It's not like I did something unforgivable. Why must you make such a big deal about it?"
 
Maybe it was due to being so stupefied earlier. This time the words came tumbling out like water from a freed dam and when I had finished speaking, I finally realized how close to you I was. I had somehow pressed up against you while trying to keep you from escaping. And my lips were currently separated from yours by less than two centimeters.  
 
"Gomene!"
 
Stepping back to give you some space but not enough to release you completely, I glanced swiftly at your face, not daring to look at you directly. It was an awkward moment for both of us.
 
"Your intentions might be right but it doesn't change the fact that you hurt me."
 
In a sudden movement, you pushed against me roughly until I staggered back. Keeping your line of sight on the ground, you muttered before taking off.
 
"Do you know what it's like to have the person you love find you that unimportant that she isn’t concerned enough to find out about you?"
 
Left alone again in the continually falling temperatures, my jaw slackened and I gaped at what the youngest Rokkie in the group had confessed.
 
"Tanakacchi....loves...me?"
 
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"Ohayo Sayu!"
 
I heard a call out to me and before I looked up, I knew who the owner of the voice was straightaway.
 
Eririn.
 
"Ohayo~!"
 
I smiled sweetly but my smile hardened when I noted the unmistakable scene of your linked hands. You were gripping onto Ai so tightly. It was as though you were afraid leader would disappear if you let go.

Remembering my manners, I greeted Ai and she did the same to me before we all resumed preparing for the concert rehearsal. Today was the final run though for the concert held over the upcoming weekend and it was crucial that everything proceeded perfectly according to plan.

I had just finished tying my long hair into a side pony tail when Aika burst into the room in a frenzy.
 
"Michi--shi--ge...san...did...you see..Nii--ga-ki and Ta--naka...san?"
 
"Woah breath Aika, they have not come in yet. What's the emergency?"
 
The sixteen year old clammed up when I asked why she was so desperate to find the two. Obviously she wasn't keen to tell me and found all sorts of excuses to run off. I am so gonna to interrogate Risa when she arrives.
 
It's funny how when you talk about someone they appear. Because immediately after I thought that to myself, Risa entered the dressing room with Reina stalking in front of her. Yes, the word is stalking as the yankii looked as though she would bite off anyone's head if they as much as met her gaze.
 
"I don't want to speak to you right now."
 
I heard Reina telling that to Risa in a most crude manner and I quirked an eyebrow at the tone that she took. Hello? This was sub-leader she was behaving so defiantly to.
 
"Umm Gaki-san? We have to run."
 
Interjecting into the conversion was Ai. And she too looked uncomfortable in Risa's presence. Finding the state of events rather weird, I observed the uneasy looks on all three of their faces.
 
What exactly was going on?
 
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Uh-oh, I knew I was in for it this time. Tanaka-san seemed really mad. She won't even speak to Niigaki-san. This means that she isn't going to forgive me for a long, long time. Who am I going to go to for fashion advice now? And who can I 'date' to go watch the latest movies? Most importantly, she won't allow Niigaki-san and I to help her get rid of that smoking problem. Yabai..
 
The music that we were rehearing to was so loud that I could barely hear myself think. Even if there was a storm raging outside at the moment I wouldn't be able to detect it. Running through the dance steps like clockwork, I was only paying partial attention to the ongoings around me. This was until the sound system shut off out of the blue and the distraught voice of a staff worker boomed out over the speakers.
 
"The stage lamp! Take cover!"
 
Nine heads shot up in that instant and we were paralyzed when we watched a piece of stage equipment break off from the batten attached to the ceiling. It was fortunate that the majority of us wouldn't be in the way of the light when it crashed down judging from its position high above us. This was true for the most of us except for the four standing in the middle of the formation.
 
Like a film put in slow motion, I stared open mouthed at the instrument that hurled towards my senpais. When it smashed down, I crouched and covered my head with my hands, squeezing my eyes shut as the glass from the shattered bulbs flew all around me...    
 

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I didn't specify who the girls behind the different POVs were but they should be pretty easy to guess? Happy reading :)

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: amEthystx on February 19, 2010, 07:18:49 PM
*POUTS*

CLIFFHANGER!

Anyway.. You UPDATED too! :)

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Did you grab that CD in the end?
- I really did went around CD stores looking for the right collection that had all my fav this few days... I haven't got one yet but soon~ CD hunting it shall be XD

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Ooooh? Who are you gonna try that stunt with?
- Hmmmm...... Depending... XD but don't they barricade the place up when they have the parade?  :huhuh Plus we don't have disney here and stuff..... I KNOW! We can go try at Chingay! LOL

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@Badsaints: *Gasps* You don’t want a TakaGaki??? What is the world coming to :panic:
- Actually......... I was hoping more on Reina/Risa XD Apparently, they are unexpectedly cute together... *thinking about the couple for next fic* XD

Eri: Poor poor poor baby! :( I just feel like giving her a big bear hug! (Even though i look more like a little koala bear instead) 

Reina: I wanna give her a big bear hug too!

Sayu: *Bear Hug* (Ok...I just wanna give everyone a big bear hug actually.. XD)

Risa: Ain't she the "luckiest" person in the fic? I mean... She had.... ar.... 1) Ai-chan 2) Reina 3)Maybe Sayu that might like her...!

Ai: There wasn't any POV of hers... but.........she is breaking the turtle heart :(

Sooo.... Who's gonna saved who? Ai-chan saved Risa? XD AND THEN!!! :)

Can you tell me the rest of the story personally? <- Insert cute pouts

XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: kuro808 on February 19, 2010, 08:02:04 PM
it is okay to call me kuro-san or kuro-kun

hmm a lot of the problems lie between interactions between Reina and everybody else and then everyone just gets sucked in and amEthystx got all the question i was asking for
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: rndmnwierd on February 21, 2010, 01:00:12 AM
I told myself that I wouldn't reply to this or any forum until I had gotten over my writers block, but once again, I can't help but break my silence to tell you, you are so mean! I love you Hammersteinz, but you give us these cliffhangers and then disappear for two months before another update! I have to know who's going to die! I have to know who you're going to kill in a tragic stage accident! Who's going to be paralyzed?! Who's going to go blind!? Who's going to end up in a coma for two years?! Noooo!!!!

*poof! I go way now*
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: badsaints on February 21, 2010, 06:07:22 PM
@Badsaints: *Gasps* You don’t want a TakaGaki??? What is the world coming to :panic:
*glares @ Hammy* And who's to blame for that? :angry:


Eri's POV is interesting. Proves that she's not dumb enough not to notice what's going on around her. And I still feel sorry for her despite her being selfish. She must like Ai a lot not to want to let go of her. I mean...it's Ai we're talking about :inlove:


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"Do you know what it's like to have the person you love find you that unimportant that she isn’t concerned enough to find out about you?"
Ouch? Hmm....Risa found about Reina's feelings? Great! Can we have TanaGaki if there's no TanaShige? :wub:


And oh! Are you going to kill someone here? *excited*
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: Mkame on February 22, 2010, 06:12:16 AM
I LOVE this story! Romances everywhere :cow:

But that cliffhanger is terrible! The ones that involve accidents are so suspenseful and I really want to know what happens between Risa and Reina! I can't wait for your next update! XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: Sukoshi on February 22, 2010, 11:59:45 AM
Gosh darn it !  :farofflook:

This is the first chapter that we get to know Eri's thoughts and look what happened !!  You and that evil stage lamp better leave her alone !!   :scolding:

and it better not be Gaki san either !  You already sent her to the hospital just a couple of chapters ago !  :sweat:

but then again... If it's for Eri's sake  :mon dunno: hmmmm........  

here's what I think will happen:  As the lamp is falling Sayu, Reina, AND Ai chan will all leap in Risa's direction, pushing her out of harms way.  The lamp crashes to the ground but miraculously everyone is left unharmed but poor Eririn is heartbroken at the sight of everyone piled on top of Risa.  Eri then gives Ai chan a good slapping (cause everyone's a little violent in this story XD) and then the 3 girls are left to fight over Gaki...whom you might kill off at a later time  :sweat:

Somehow I get the feeling that Sayu's already gotten over Eri, therefore it really is 3 to 1 for Gaki san...unless the next chapter will have something to re-sparkle Sayu's love for the turtle.  :mon misch:  *wink wink*


Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: jenmoshka on February 23, 2010, 06:24:59 AM
I've been absent from this forum for farrrr too long and have been lurking for the last couple of days trying to refamiliarize myself with some of the new fics and new people.
Yours is the first fic I've sat down and read from start to finish, and I thought I'd break my silence and tell you what a fantastic job you're doing!  :heart: I was hooked from the first post and now you've left us all with a dreadful cliffhanger!!
I can't wait for your next post!!  XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: Hart on February 24, 2010, 06:08:13 AM
Sumimasen. I completely forgot that I actually read this a while ago. I thought this was that other fic with the Kids or something like that when I saw that there was an update. :sweat:

I love how you just scramble up the gorokkies and give us an interesting love-pentagon.

In typical Hammy fashion, 4 out of the 5 major players in this story are facing death and chances are at least one of them will dies.
I would be totally shocked if no one dies. :lol:
First of all, which 4 were under that ill-fated stage lamp?
Second, will someone actually be saved?
Third, of the 4, who will make it out without a scratch, slightly injured, severely injured, and mostly dead? :lol:
Fourth, will someone risk their life to save at least 1 of the other 3?
Finally, if Gaki surprisingly survives, who will she choose: Ai, Sayu, Reina, or my Wild Card choice - Aika? <--I don't know why I choose Aika. I've felt she was neglected for most of the story. The same goes for LinLin.

Until the next update, I'm gonna attempt to record how many times Gaki and Kame have died in yours stories and how they died.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: kRisZ on March 06, 2010, 07:41:43 AM
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I didn't want you to discover that I was weeping. Crying over how I knew you didn't feel the same for me.
Eh!!!  Eri.?. :shocked

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Yet fate likes to work in mysterious ways and on most occasions, seems to relish tormenting people.
True

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I knew you would be happy again if I released you from this relationship that was causing you so much stress. Nevertheless, I couldn't bring myself to let you go, not after knowing how it feels to have you belong to me. 
OH.EM.GEE.   :scared:

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Forgive me for being selfish Ai-chan. Forgive me for being cruel. But I will do everything I can, to keep you with me.
Damn... not a very wise decision but she's madly in love   :stunned:

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"Don't leave me Ai-chan. Never let me go."
:fainted:

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"I didn't tell her to spy! I told her to keep an eye on you. And let me know if you ran into some trouble."
 
"And that's not spying?!"
:D

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"I never knew you thought so little of me. You couldn't be bothered to ask me if you wanted to know something? Getting Aika to do the leg work... You're too low!"
Ouches

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On reflex, you raised one hand and slapped me across the face. The force of it snapped my head sideways and I could taste blood in my mouth.
OMG again, ouches

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"Do you know what it's like to have the person you love find you that unimportant that she isn’t concerned enough to find out about you?"
That must really hurt

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"Tanakacchi....loves...me?"
lol

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What exactly was going on?
Good question  XD

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"The stage lamp! Take cover!"
:stoned:

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Like a film put in slow motion, I stared open mouthed at the instrument that hurled towards my senpais. When it smashed down, I crouched and covered my head with my hands, squeezing my eyes shut as the glass from the shattered bulbs flew all around me...   
:scared:  :stoned:  :mon freeze:  :mon wtf: 
 :pleeease:  :pleeease:  :pleeease:
 :prayers: :prayers: :prayers:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: lil_hamz on March 12, 2010, 06:07:13 PM
MGR 15
 
@Sticky: I can never find a single CD with all the songs I like too. I saw the Chingay floats the other day! And it wasn't even the day of the parade  :D Oh, you have plans for a TanaGaki fic? YATTA!!
 
@Kuro-san: Hee, that's why it's called Merry Go Round :P
 
@rnd: It's wasn't 2 months. 2 weeks maybe? XD Oh I don't know anymore. I've lost track of time. But I do know it's been centuries since you updated. Please unblock yourself soon. I miss your fic
 
@BS: Well that is true. It's hard to let go of Ai after you have had her isn't it. Who can blame the Kame for being selfish? Could you be the first person to be excited that I will kill someone? XD
 
@Mkame: Are you a TanaGaki supporter? Great! Cuz these 2 really aren't very popular.
 
@Sukoshi-chan: XD XD XD 3 of the girls didn't leap in Risa's direction. It was more even. Eri lunged for Ai while Risa did the same for Reina. How did you know about Sayu? Rather than saying she is over the turtle. I think it's more of her deciding to not obstruct Eri's happiness :cry: Sayu is so noble!!
 
@jenmoshka: Awww~~ Arigatou! I'm so happy you read this from start to where I have stopped. It really makes my month to know readers like my fic
 
@Hart: Are you shocked? No one is dead as of now :P Ahhh, gomene about Lin Lin. I'm still thinking of how I can work her in
 
@kR: Sometimes words hurt even more than physical injuries ne :( I can't begin to imagine how Reina's words must have hurt the bean.
 
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Merry Go Round
Chapter 16


I looked down at the cuts on my arm and couldn't help wincing as the staff dabbed antiseptic cream on them. The broken glass pieces had flew in every direction and injured everyone to varying degrees except for Michishige-san and Takahashi-san. Thankfully none of our wounds were fatal and I said a silent prayer in thanks for the grace we had been shown.

In order to distract myself from looking down at how one of our managers was dressing my wounds and hopefully the pain, I glanced up and looked around, observing the other activities in the busy dressing room. Jun and Lin were helping each other apply medication since all of the staff were engaged in various duties. Niigaki-san was sitting on the arm chair alone as she stared at Tanaka-san who was seated in front of the dresser.

Takahashi-san and Michishige-san were fussing over and comforting Kamei-san who seemed to have sustained the most serious injuries out of the group. Not only were her arms and hands covered with abrasions, the glass shards had tore through her gym pants resulting in multiple lacerations on her legs. Two of the managers were cleaning up her scratches while the senpais held onto her.   

Poor Kamei-san.

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I watched you scrutinize your arm as you dabbed gingerly at it with a tissue paper. The relatively long line of red extended across your forearm and ended just a short distance away from your elbow. Although your head was lowered, I could tell that you knew I was staring at you as you refused to raise your head in my direction or even look my way. 

Heaving a soft sigh, I stood up from the chair and started walking towards you. Along the way, I picked up a small bottle of lotion and some cotton swabs from the first aid kid which had been left open on a low makeshift table. With each step I took, I ran over in my mind the words that I would say to begin a conversation with you. One which you would hopefully allow me to finish. I didn't want a reenactment of what happened early this morning.

A dull aching was pounding at the back of my head and it was impeding my train of thought as well as making it hard to focus. Despite that, I somehow managed to string together a coherent sentence.

Tapping you on the shoulder lightly, I opened my mouth to speak only to have you jerk your head towards me in shock at the sudden contact. Clearly you hadn't expected me to approach you. Before I could begin my sloppily rehearsed speech, you jumped from the chair and bolted out the door. Not wanting to let you go again without baring my side of the story, I gave chase, stumbling a little in the process as a scene of white flashed past my eyes. 

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"It hurts."

Whimpering and sobbing pitifully, you cried as you lay in Ai's embrace. When you saw the light plummeting down, the only thing you could think of was Ai's safety. Hence without thinking about the dangers, you rushed forward and pushed her out of the way. The consequence of that act was you laying completely over her and shuddering involuntarily when the glass bits rained down on the both of you.

Ai wasn't hurt at all, but the same couldn't be said for you. I guess she was feeling remorseful because leader didn't leave your side at any moment in the period after. Not even when she heard that Risa was also injured.

Seeing how desperately you clung onto Ai, I realized that you, my best friend couldn't possibly survive without her. Your world revolved only around her and it appeared that this will never change. Perhaps it's about time I gave up...for good. No one likes a third wheel sticking around and there is a reason why relationships that work out involve just two people.

I can finally let Ai-chan take my place, of staying by your side.

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"Tanakacchi! Let me dress your wound!"

I could hear you yelling as you chased after me all the way from the dressing room to the corridor. Although I could hear the desperate pleas calling for me to stop, I didn't. Noticing the door leading to the stairway as I ran, I yanked it open and ducked inside gasping for air. Running was never my forte and obviously, my stamina hadn't improved as much as I would have liked.

I thought I was at last safe, adequately hidden away from the prying eyes of everyone else in the building. Certain that no one will witness me crying, I finally let down my defenses and allowed the tears I had been holding back to fall. All that built up stress from what happened earlier, the pain from the gash on my arm and how I had reacted in front of you.

"Does it hurt a lot? Let me see that."

Someone grabbed my upper arm firmly but gently and spun me around. When my eyes met yours, I gazed into them for a split second before looking away, determined to not be swayed by the concern filled in your honey brown eyes.

We were all caught up in perfecting the dance for Resonant Blue. The music was pumping into our ears and adrenaline coursed through our veins. No one had expected the equipment to fail or a near disastrous accident to occur. When the warning shout blasted through the speakers, the information didn't sink in fast enough for me. I was too stunned to do anything. But you saved me, tackling me to the ground and out of harm's way when the lights fell. I would never forget that moment when you saved my life at the risk of your own.

Bending down slightly so as to not strain my arm by having to hold it higher, you blew softly at the cut to ease the stinging sensation.

"I've brought the medicine. Sit down so I can apply it for you."

I knew you were worried about me and I was happy that you took the first step to repair our strained relationship. By right, I should obey your instructions and sit down on the floor. However, my stubborn streak decided to kick in and I once again refused your aid.

"Don't show so much concern for me Gaki-san. Not when you aren't going to accept my feelings for you."

Wrenching my arm out of your hands, I began walking down the stairs, deciding to head for home. Heck my stuff that was still in the dressing room or the fact that I didn't have any money or my cellphone with me. I'll just get mother to pay for the cab fare when I arrive home.

"I'm your senpai! I have a duty to take care of you!"

You hollered from the top of the stairs, your voice cracking a little. Were you weeping? Could it be that you were grieving for me? Shaking my head slightly, I pushed that thought out of my mind. There was only ever Ai in your eyes. Maybe now there was Sayumi too.

Since it would never be me, why should I continue to stay in your presence? Why should I give myself more opportunities to fall harder for you? From this day forth, I will cut down my interaction with you to solely work related issues. That way I can protect myself and prevent my heart from breaking any further.

"You have other kouhais to take care of. Just leave me alone! Let me be, okay?!"

I was at the very bottom of the stairs, a few flights below where you had remained. You didn't reply my second statement. Instead something fell from above and landed a few centimeters away from my feet. The contents of the bottle spilled out when the container burst open upon impact and splashed the creamy ointment in various directions. Angered at what I presumed were you throwing down the canister in response to my callous behavior, I hastened my steps and sprinted out of the exit.

I never knew I could love and hate you at the same time.

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"Let me leave some instructions and I'll take you home. Wait here for me?"

I detached your arms from around my torso and patted your head in a bid to sooth your nerves. I knew you were reluctant to let go of me but I insisted on breaking away from you for a short duration. As leader, I had the responsibility of conveying the messages and instructions that management had relayed. This time it was that we would be granted a week's off to recuperate with immediate effect.

Looking around the usual dressing rooms that have been assigned to Morning Musume, I realized Risa was nowhere to be found. As I didn't want to delay sending you home any longer, I had no choice but to trust one of the other members to get the job done.

"Sayu, please make sure all the members know that we'll be getting the next seven days off. Tell them to rest well before the next series of rehearsals start."

After I had briefed Sayumi and was about about to walk away, she pulled me near and whispered into my ear.

"You saw what Eririn did. For her sake, please don't let her down."

As the middle Rokkie loosened her grasp, I felt a shiver spread throughout my entire body when I realized what she had told me was true. Eri had put me above everything else. She had proven that she could even die for me. Chewing onto my lower lip, I made a decision. One which I was determined to stand by.

Takahashi Ai will love Eri with all my heart. She will be the only person for me.

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"Ai-chan?"

I looked up at you as I shifted my head from lying on your shoulder. You seemed surprised, probably because I hadn't fallen asleep. We were presently travelling in the cab on the way to your apartment situated in central Tokyo where you had asked me to move in with you.

"Hmm?"

"I was so afraid."

Gripping tighter onto your jacket until my knuckles turned white from the effort, I felt you increase the pressure of your hold on me as you pulled me closer to lean against your chest.

"It's normal to feel afraid. What happened was unexpected and very frightening. The shattering of the glass and the stage descending into darkness in the moments immediately after..."

"It's not that."

Burrowing my face into your shirt, my voice was muffled as I added in the next sentence.

"I was scared that if I had died, I would never be able to see you again."

Tears began to drip from the ends of my eyes running down the sides of my face. I sniffed repeatedly to stop myself from sobbing. Despite my courageous attempts, the never-ending water droplets continued to fall, drenching your outfit with their descent.

"I'm sorry Ai-chan. I ruined your clothes."

Using the back of my right hand to wipe at the tears, my action was halted when you slipped the fingers of your left limp in mine. With your right thumb, you tenderly wiped away the fresh round of tears that had well up behind my eyes. 

"Don't be silly. What's a shirt compared to you? I should be the one apologizing. My behavior this period has been anything but worthy of being your girlfriend. But I've sorted everything out."

Tracing your thumb from beneath my eye to my lips, you grazed past it with a light brush.

"I love you, just you."

Angling your head to access my mouth, you kissed me softly. I was taken aback momentarily when it dawned on me that we were still in the taxi and that the driver could most probably see what we were doing from the rear view mirror. Nevertheless, I didn't resist your advances and permitted myself to melt in your arms. I have waited far too long for you to reconfirm that it was truly me whom you loved. And now that you have, I wasn't going to hold back anymore.

Wrapping my arms around your waist, I parted my lips so that your tongue could enter my mouth and roam freely. As your hands ran under my blouse and across my heated skin, I smiled into our kiss. 

I'm finally the only one in your heart.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: kuro808 on March 12, 2010, 07:37:27 PM
I guess it is properly called  XD

Everyone seems to be reeling from the previous actions and this sort of slow recovery stages makes it very romantic, good job
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: Sukoshi on March 13, 2010, 02:51:44 AM
@HartAKL85: Linlin?  but isn't it weird enough that Aika's now in the story?  lol oops did I say that out loud?  *runs*
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Chapter 16:

Darn you, Mr. lamp!  darn you!    :grr:

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A dull aching was pounding at the back of my head and it was impeding my train of thought as well as making it hard to focus. 

...I gave chase, stumbling a little in the process as a scene of white flashed past my eyes.

*crosses arms*  This better not be coma number 2!  If Gaki san becomes blind or dies from a stomach ache!!    :mon zoom:
why...
why......I'll....
....
erm....  :mon dunno:
*insert threat here*
yes, that's right! :mon determined:  ....Scary threat isn't it?  Well then prepare yourself for *that* !   :mon geek:

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Angered at what I presumed were you throwing down the canister in response to my callous behavior, I hastened my steps and sprinted out of the exit.

*sigh*  and this is why the two can never get together!  Reina's always ditching Gaki san in her time of need!  :mon duh:
and no one even found her in this chapter!!   :stoned:

[imagination] Everyone goes home.  7 days later,  Sayu exits into the stairwell only to find !!!    :mon scare: [/imagination]

NO!!  just NO!!


lol thank god we don't share the same brain XD  now to wait for the next update  :sweat:




Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: alwaysYou on March 13, 2010, 04:48:58 AM
wow..i never though that i will hate ur fic.. :lol: :lol:
you make me so wanna slap aichan in ur fic.. XD

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A dull aching was pounding at the back of my head and it was impeding my train of thought as well as making it hard to focus.

...I gave chase, stumbling a little in the process as a scene of white flashed past my eyes.
from the hammy we know..you gonna make gakisan blind isnt it.. :D
and then more n more things will happen if gakisan is blind..bt even she really turn blind, we dont have to worry, she have sayu and reina..XD..
but if u make aichan ditch eri and make eri very pitiful here, be careful, i might be the one who hammied you..XD
Eri need a happy ending, whether with aichan or not..
and i think in the end, aichan might not be with anyone.. :banghead: although i do hope she  be with the one she really love..yet the one she really love might not love her anymore when time goes by.. :angry:


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We were presently travelling in the cab on the way to your apartment situated in central Tokyo where you had asked me to move in with you.
there's goes by aigaki..
what a "wrong" move..

see, how ur fic make me love and hate aichan.. :angry:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: badsaints on March 13, 2010, 06:00:37 AM
Ehhh?! Nobody died here :shocked Shocku!!!

Wow Risa chose to save Reina? Is it because Reina is the closest to her when the acciden happened? Or for another reason? Damn that stubborn Reina! This is what happen when you allow pride to get in the way :smhid

But oh boy, poor Risa...Thought she's only suffering from gastric? Or are you gonna make her suffer more? XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: kRisZ on March 13, 2010, 06:37:28 AM
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A dull aching was pounding at the back of my head and it was impeding my train of thought as well as making it hard to focus.
Hmmm

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I gave chase, stumbling a little in the process as a scene of white flashed past my eyes. 
Again, Hmmm

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I can finally let Ai-chan take my place, of staying by your side.
Oh Sayu

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"Don't show so much concern for me Gaki-san. Not when you aren't going to accept my feelings for you."
Can I say duh!  :roll:

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"I'm your senpai! I have a duty to take care of you!"
Go Risa  :onioncheer: let her know who's the boss  :D

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There was only ever Ai in your eyes. Maybe now there was Sayumi too.
Just maybe... lots of things happen because of maybe

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Angered at what I presumed were you throwing down the canister in response to my callous behavior, I hastened my steps and sprinted out of the exit.
Something's wrong!!!  :scared:

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Takahashi Ai will love Eri with all my heart. She will be the only person for me.
Arg  :fainted: One way relationship has a high unsuccessful rate

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"I was scared that if I had died, I would never be able to see you again."
Eri  :lol:

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"I love you, just you."
Why am I not convinced.?.  :D

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I'm finally the only one in your heart.
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Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: Hart on March 13, 2010, 10:59:10 AM
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@Hart: Are you shocked? No one is dead as of now

*sarcastic*sure.........jk  :P
Yeah, I was a little bit surprised. Sorta suspected Aika to be one of the girls to be injured.
Considering Eri's personality in this fic, I knew if Ai was close to where that damn lamp was gonna fall, Eri would definitely protect her. And I was right.  :yep:  And as always, Gaki being the mother of the group, rushes to protect Reina, even though I don't think she deserves it after what happens later on.

Ugh! You gave Gaki a concussion. Or am I wrong?  :?  This is like Black & Blue all over again.
Whatever is happening to Risa, if you weren't gonna kill her then, I KNEW she was gonna be injured severely.

Reina Baka!!!  :angry:  Don't leave her unconscious near the stairs!! You'd better pray that Sayu, one of the Pandas, or Aika will find her. Imagine what would happen if Koharu actually finds her................*shudders* On second thought, never mind.
If those deathsticks you're inhaling don't kill you, an angry bunny or dense monkey in love with an innocent turtle will. Maybe.  :D

Okay, random thoughts: Wouldn't it be really weird and awkward if we find out that LinLin has feelings for Gaki or Ai? And the only sane and reasonable member of the group is Aika? Wait. Actually I think that's a given. With all the drama that has been going on, I think she should be leader.  :lol:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: rndmnwierd on March 13, 2010, 11:12:24 AM
You is so ebil. Poor Risa, just trying to help Reina at her own expense. Sayu,thinking she's putting Eri in good hands.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 15 (10-02-19)
Post by: Mkame on March 13, 2010, 11:58:44 PM
This was so sad and nerve wracking! I was really tense reading it and ERI :( It's so sad about all the unrequited loves :cry:

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Angered at what I presumed were you throwing down the canister in response to my callous behavior, I hastened my steps and sprinted out of the exit.
I wonder if it was actually anger or if Risa did accidentally! At first I thought she might have passed out or something :(

the driver could most probably see what we were doing from the rear view mirror

I wish I was that driver >_> Wonder how he felt XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: cogi_yoshi on March 14, 2010, 12:10:06 AM
oohh!!! Although 7 out of 9 was hurt....no one died in the accident!!!let's celebrate!!!  :cow: :cow:
But I had a feeling...you're just saving the 'best' for last..ahahaha... anyways... gaah!!!hot session in the cab!!!! (i'm just thinking too much  XD) But I hope the driver, if he ever did see it, would just remain quiet. I mean, it would be such a...uhh..how do you call it? hmm.. my english is leaving at this moment..ahahaha..but it would be such a waste when Ai finally decided to stick with Eri and if that scandal comes out, on has to leave the group or so...anyways....It's been a long time since I read something here... and commented but your fic was one of the first five that I read..ahahahaha..XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: Aisacchan on March 24, 2010, 04:57:45 AM
Hi, I'm your new reader  :)

I enjoyed your story so much  :twothumbs
It very intriguing

I feel bad for Eri  :cry:
Hope Aichan wouldn't hurt her again  :(

I'll waiting for next chapter
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: Swtme03 on March 29, 2010, 08:15:40 AM
 :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic:

Where has this fanfic been all my life!!!!
Or more like.... HOW COME I'M JUST NOW READING THIS??!!!?!?!!?   :mon slapself:

I just finished reading all 16 chapters in one sitting and I'm going crazy!  :frustrated:

Gaki secretly loves Ai,  :shy2:
.... but Eri wins her over.  :err:
Sayu secretly loves Eri,  but since Eri is with Ai, Sayu is devastated and turns to Gaki for comfort and kisses her in front of everyone.  :scared:
Reina gets pissed at Sayu because she secretly loves Gaki  :hehehe: and spills Sayu's love for Eri, hurting Sayu in the process.
Ai blames Gaki for the altercations and Gaki get's sad.  :pleeease: 
Ai later feels guilty about blaming her.
Reina smokes?!!?  :smoke:........ :mon wtf: 
Gaki get's wasted and Reina almost takes advantage of her :on bleed: until Gaki unconsciously confesses her love for Ai in the midst of the intimacy  :mon spit:  Reina leaves.
Sayu calls Gaki.
Gaki doesn't reply.
Sayu get's worried, calls Ai.
Ai subconsciously shows up at Gaki's apartment where she finds Sayu at Gaki's door.
Gaki is face down in a pool of her bloody vomit and is taken to the hospital.  :mon scare: :mon blood:
Ai starts to realize she has feelings for Gaki,  :on woohoo: but isn't really sure if the feelings are true.
Eri doesn't really even acknowledge Sayu's love for her.  :fainted:
There's a tiny crush building between Sayu and Gaki.  :mon scare:
Aika has a little crush on Reina. :shy2: 
Reina confesses her love to Gaki.  :stoned:
Eri realizes the feelings that Ai has towards Gaki, but vows to keep Ai and never let her go.  :imdead:
Eri saves Ai's life, Gaki saves Reina's.
Ai is determined to return the love Eri has shown her back to her. :frustrated:
Gaki tries to address Reina's wounds, but Reina doesn't want to be around her and ends up getting angry. :mon exhaust:
Sayu gives up on Eri and Gaki passes out??!!!

 :cool2:



I'm totally sucked into this story!!  :love:
No wonder everyone's crushing on Gaki!! She's so considerate and caring!! She worries about EVERYONE before herself no matter how sick she is or how awkward the situation is!!
She's so damn loving I'm going insane!!  :mon lovelaff:
How can Aichan NOT see that first?!!
Don't get me wrong. Eri is really REALLY sweet. But Aichan being Gaki's best friend...how could it have not happened  :mon whimper:

I'm totally look forward to the rest of the chapters!  :twothumbs
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: lil_hamz on April 22, 2010, 10:40:02 AM
@Kuro-san: This chapter made you feel romantic? YATTA~ I'm happy. I never feel as though I could portray that sort of feelings properly.

@Sukoshi-chan: XD What's wrong with Aika being in it? As long as she isn't romantically involved with one of the members. LOL, what's the threat you are planning for me? I wonder if I can risk putting Gaki into a coma to find out.   

@AA: How about I make Gaki slap Ai in the fic? Then we will get our wish of seeing it in the play XD   Shhh, don't give away my plan yet. Although I have not decided how I'm gonna torture her here :P

@BS: Well, the girls were in the RB formation so one of the reasons Risa dived for Reina and not Ai was because she was closer. Of course I'll make her suffer more. It's me remember? XD

@kR: Can I call you this too like AA? There are less letters to type :P EHhh? You aren't convinced that Eri is the only one in Ai's heart? Have you changed your mind after this chapter?

@Hart: Maybe subconsciously I am turning this into B&B cuz I need updates of it so badly. *indirect hint to rnd* :D What's wrong with Koha finding Gaki? And lol at your Aika being leader comment. I totally agree though.

@rnd: Strangely I feel more for Sayu than Risa. I wonder why *scratches head*

@Mkame: I wish I was that cab driver too! And the ticket seller or gift shop staff at Disneyland so I will be able to see Risa :D

@cogi-san: Awww, I'm so happy to know that mine is one of the first 5 fics that you've read. Arigatou!! I think you've just given me an idea of what could happen in the later chapters :)

@Aisacchan: Welcome!! Thanks for reading and liking my fic. I hope you will stay and read more of my stories ;)

@Swtme03: Oh my gosh! A fellow Gaki fan!! *glomps* Where have you been all my life?!?! *is being dramatic* XD That being slapped emoticon is too cute! Reminds me of what I hope to see Risa do to Ai in the Fashionable play. Well, the bean IS supposed to be a meanie in it *winks* I LOVE how you did a mini summary of this story. I think I prefer reading it to one of my own chapters :D

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 17
 
The banging of the door swinging close resonated throughout the stairwell as Reina let it slam shut behind her. In addition to the echoes, the near empty landing was filled with the painful whimpers of one Niigaki Risa. Kneeling on the steps with one hand clinging onto the metal railing running along the stairs and the other pressed up against her temple, she tried to stand up by leaning most of her weight against the cold steel.
 
After Reina had stomped off, the twenty-one year old had intended to return to the dressing room area. However, the sudden blurring of her vision by a dramatic increase in the number of floaters caused her to miss a step. The combination of spots and fragment threads casting shadows on her retina was a phenomenon that Risa had never experienced prior to today.
 
If the usually agile woman hadn't reached out to pull on the railing in time, she would have tumbled backwards and ended up at the bottom of the flight. Although she had managed to stop herself from falling, Risa couldn't prevent her grip on the bottle of antiseptic lotion from loosening and hence dropping to the ground beneath.
 
With trembling hands, the young woman shifted her hands cautiously one over the other in a painstakingly slow process to arrive at the exit before the gradual heaviness in her eyes extended to her head and took over her entire being completely.
 
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The lights in the room were turned low as Ai busied herself with filling up a basin with warm water prior to bringing it to the bed where Eri was resting.
 
"It's okay Ai-chan. you don't have to do this."
 
Disregarding the feeble protest with a wave of her hand, Ai sat down on the soft mattress and proceeded to wring dry a small hand towel. Since it was inconvenient for the turtle to shower due to the fear of wetting her wounds, the ever considerate leader had thought up this idea to clean Eri up so as to make her feel more comfortable.
 
With gentle strokes, the elder wiped carefully at the areas surrounding the cuts and made sure that the crystal clear droplets didn't seep anywhere near the open abrasions. So concentrated on her actions, she didn't notice that the rhythmic motions had lulled the weary girl into slumber. By the time she was done, Eri was deep in dreamland and wholly oblivious to the happenings around her.
 
Replacing the damp cloth onto the edge of the plastic basin, Ai once again transferred her gaze onto her dozing girlfriend. Watching her chest rise and fall with her shallow breathing, how her eyelashes fluttered whenever she shifted in her sleep and the way her tantalizing lips parted ever so slightly, Ai smiled. It was a beam which came from her heart and for the first time since a long while, she felt a genuine warmness spread throughout her body.   
 
You're like an angel, so beautiful and pure.
 
Leaning in closer till their faces were barely inches apart, Ai whispered before planting a tender kiss on those pouty lips.     
 
"I'm so thankful I didn't hurt you more than I already have."
 
The near fatal accident had jolted the young leader to realize the extent of Eri’s importance in her heart. And in this instant, she couldn’t be clearer of her feelings for the injured girl. After the mishap, Ai couldn’t be torn away from her girlfriend even when frantic staff members approached her to clarify what had transpired within those tense moments.
 
Even if Tsunku himself had appeared, Ai wouldn’t have given him the time of day. The oldest Rokkie’s wellbeing took paramount precedence over everything else and not even her concern for Risa could overshadow it. 
 
“I’ve finally figured out my feelings. I can’t lose Gaki-san, but without you, I couldn’t…and I wouldn’t want to live on.”
 
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Jun Jun watched in total awe at the female worker of the restaurant serve up an endless line of various food items. When the final dish was brought to them, the exchange student from China couldn't hold back her astonishment and exclaimed in utter surprise.
 
"Are they having a discount or something? Because this amount of food is just crazy."
 
Rubbing her hands together with anticipation as her eyes shined with delight at the spread of delicious foodstuff, the younger Chinese girl replied with a huge beam on her slightly chubby face.
 
"This is just about enough for the three of us."
 
Before she could enquire more about the identity of the mystery third person, the piercing voice of a certain miracle member preceded her entry into the cozy eatery.
 
"Kusumi-san?!"
 
"Koniichipa~!"
 
Settling comfortably into a chair, Koharu immediately picked up the wooden chopsticks placed on the table in front of her and split them apart.
 
"Itadakimasu!"
 
"Hai, itadakimasu!"
 
Staring with mouth agape at the pair tucking into the food with relish, Jun Jun could only join them in eating. Whatever questions she had about why Koharu had appeared would have to be pushed aside momentarily for now.
 
"Kusumi-san is really the lucky 7 member. If it wasn't because of your Ohastar filming, you could have become pancakes! SQUISH! Just like that!"
 
Making the action of a flattened pancake with her hands, Lin Lin deduced, her chopsticks painting patterns in the air as they never left her fingers during her little charade performance.
 
"I know! It was really lucky for me. Niigaki-san saved Tanaka-san and Kamei-san pushed Takahashi-san aside. But what about me?! I would have been a goner if I had been present since I'm right in the center for Resonant Blue!"
 
Her excessively loud voice rose above all the other patrons and Jun Jun had to fight down the urge to cover her ears with her hands.
 
Argh, why must Lin Lin invite Kusumi-san? I wanted her advice on an important issue. An issue which involved a person I have feelings for.
 
“Does anyone want to go to the washroom?”
 
The sudden question startled Jun Jun and she blinked twice in response. Assuming that the action implied a negative reply, Koharu slid out of her seat after Lin Lin shook her head.
 
“Gosh, finally I can have some peace.”
 
Propping her head up on one hand, Jun Jun heaved a relief sigh to be left alone with her compatriot. Turning to the still Hacchiki, the older took a deep breath before asking.
 
“Lin, what if…I mean hypothetically, you fell in love with a girl. Would you confess?”
 
“Uh-huh, you should totally tell Michishige-san how you feel.”
 
The mouthful of water which was in the process of travelling down the tallest member’s throat was hurled back up when she choked and sputtered into her hands, attracting the curious gazes from other patrons in the restaurant.
 
“I- - -I..never said i- -t..it was Michishige-san!”
 
“Geez Jun, I might be young and always hungry. But I know the look of love when I see it. Plus, imitation is the greatest form of adoration. And you’ve been copying her in every aspect.”
 
Staring at Lin Lin with mouth agape in amazement, Jun Jun stuttered.
 
“我的天呀!(Oh my god) Do you think anyone else in the group knows?”
 
“What does it matter as long as they don’t reveal it?”
 
Sinking back into her seat, Jun fanned at her face with her hand. All this was too much to take in the duration of one meal. If what Lin Lin said was true, then the possibility of the other members being aware of how she felt towards her senpai was very real. Would they be supportive of her if she went after the narcissistic bunny?
 
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 "Michishige-san, feel free to tell me which of the shows you want a copy of. I'll burn them for you to take home."
 
Nodding gratefully at the departing figure of her kouhai, Sayumi sat down on the roller chair and scrolled the cursor over the long list of television programs that Aika had recorded onto her PC.
 
After learning about the middle Rokkie missing yet another episode of the show she was currently chasing, the most mature member of the group known by her granny-like voice welcomed her raven haired senpai into her home and gave her free rein to the contents of her PC.
 
Since they had seven whole days of leave from the near accident, Sayumi jumped at the chance to catch up on all the viewing pleasure she had missed out on.   
 
"This, this.....this....oh and this..."
 
Engrossed in the numerous titles displayed on the screen , Sayumi clicked open the hidden window by mistake and her eyes widened in shock when she sped read through the contents of the website. The click of the doorknob announcing Aika's arrival back into her bedroom resulted in the bunny spinning around and staring at the younger with a pair of confused, twin black orbs.
 
"Where did you pick it up from? When did you start to smoke Aika?"
 
The tumbler of ice-cold tea that Aika had obtained upon Sayumi's requests fell from her hands and bounced twice on the carpeted floor before coming to a still laying on its side.
 
Realizing that her poison-tongued senpai had discovered her surfing websites on how to kick the nicotine habit, Aika stuttered an almost incoherent reply in fear.
 
"I....I'm n-ot smo--kin..g. It's no-t..not...m--e..."
 
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Konbawa..
 
Hey there!
 
Whassup

 
"ARGH!!"
 
Snapping the phone shut and pounding her fist into the back of the couch, Reina ran one hand through her hair in annoyance before shaking her head several times in an attempt to be rid of her distraught mood.
 
Why was it so damn hard to craft an innocent sounding text message to her sub-leader? She just wanted to know if the bean had recovered from her injuries and sound her out on whether they were still on good terms.
 
After all the little tantrums that she had been directing at Risa, Reina was somewhat worried that the sensible individual might finally be fed up of her obnoxious ways.
 
Unfortunately, no matter how many times she tried to write the perfect, harmless sounding mobile phone email, she couldn't. The message either sounded fake or glaringly apparent that she was trying too hard.
 
Dissatisfied with how her plan was going, Reina had half a mind to abandon her intention. Just as she was about to switch the device off and plug it into the charger for the night, the gadget rang abruptly and the repetitive melody startled her so much that the expensive cellphone model almost flew out of her hands and would have clattered noisily onto the parquet floor if she hadn't on reflex scrambled to catch it in time.
 
"Moshi-- mo...shi?"
 
In between breathless gasps, Reina greeted into the cellphone, entirely unaware of the identity of the caller. She had forgotten to look at the caller ID before connecting the line. Nevertheless, when the person spoke, the yankii immediately recognized who she was.
 
“I knew you weren't that bright but seriously, this beats everything else!"

The tone that the caller took didn't please the yankii and on instinct, she shot back indignantly.

"No one speaks to Reina like this. What the hell is wrong with you?!"

There was silence on the other end as the sound of light breathing entered the High King member's ears.

"You're right, I was too harsh. Just meet me at the café near your apartment tomorrow evening at 7. You have to turn up, or you will surely regret it.”
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 17 (10-04-22)
Post by: kuro808 on April 22, 2010, 10:44:24 AM
The Sayu part was really interesting XD

keep up the work
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 17 (10-04-22)
Post by: rndmnwierd on April 22, 2010, 01:01:56 PM
Geez, poor Risa, first the stomach thing and now this? What next? Amnesia?

Maybe I shouldn't give you ideas... Or should I? :twisted:

As for AiEri, on the one hand I'm kinda sad you seem to be straying away from my beloved Takagaki, but at the same time, I do like this pairing and I'm dying to see more TanaGakiShige.

Lol at Lin Lin's nonchalance at Jun's feelings and actually, that whole scene in general.

Oh no, will Aika spill the beans on Reina?

And speaking of the yankii, who called her?! Miki? Yossui? And what will she do when she finds out Gaki passed out? Guilty because she wasn't there to help her? Argh, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 17 (10-04-22)
Post by: amEthystx on April 22, 2010, 01:22:51 PM
Chilli Banana Apple Strawberry CD Tissue Paper Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious!!!! <- learnt this from somewhere  ;)

I think i have forgotten to comment on Chapter 16! o.O!

XD Forgiven?

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You didn't reply my second statement. Instead something fell from above and landed a few centimeters away from my feet. The contents of the bottle spilled out when the container burst open upon impact and splashed the creamy ointment in various directions.
- LOL~ I love this part the best actually.. didn't expect our well tamed.. motherly Risa to just throw the bottle out.. :P But then again.. being in that situation..I guess the limit was off chart already~ XD

I guess your story consist of the different kind of love~ haha

Ai - Got a gf but unsure of the love since her best friend was in love with her 2.. best friend and love line is just too blur :P

Risa - Unrequited Love (as always the case..poor Risa.. lol)

Reina - Want all or nothing.. stubborn (In a way)..protects herself.. Self destructive! lol~

Sayu - Direct opposite of Reina~ Looking from far is just enough type~

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"I'm so thankful I didn't hurt you more than I already have."
I guess we are all thankful too~ XD

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“我的天呀!(Oh my god) Do you think anyone else in the group knows?”

Lol.. this is very random~ BUT~ usually... I or most.. says "OH MY GOD" and the rest in chinese instead XD

I was hoping the call is from Risaaaa... but i i'm going with Sayu~ Sounds more likely... Please let them make up already~ :P
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: badsaints on April 22, 2010, 03:53:30 PM
@BS: Of course I'll make her suffer more. It's me remember? XD
OMG how on earth did I forget? :lol:

@rnd: Strangely I feel more for Sayu than Risa. I wonder why *scratches head*
Cause Sayu is hawt? Heehee Hammy gonna slap me one of these days XD


Gaki-san fainted! :shocked Gah! Stupid Reina! She and her stupid yankii pride! I do hope nothing serious will happen to the brat (aka going blind, lose her memory or contract a terminal disease :lol: What? I mean you are the writer :P) But oh shit! Sayu found out about Reina's smoking habit :O

Ooohhh Ai taking care of Eri :wub: Somehow that's so sweet. There won't be any more drama for the AiEri couple, right? *being hopeful here*
 
Whahaha Jun has a not-so-secret crush on Sayu :lol: That scene between the pandas is so cute XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 17 (10-04-22)
Post by: kRisZ on April 24, 2010, 07:44:31 PM
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Can I call you this too like AA? There are less letters to type :P
Oh please, go ahead  :)  You can even shorten it... like k or R :D I won't mind  :D

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and not even her concern for Risa could overshadow it. 
Hmmm

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“I’ve finally figured out my feelings. I can’t lose Gaki-san, but without you, I couldn’t…and I wouldn’t want to live on.”
:shocked
 :depressed: My TakaGaki  :depressed:

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“Gosh, finally I can have some peace.”
:lol:

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Unfortunately, no matter how many times she tried to write the perfect, harmless sounding mobile phone email, she couldn't. The message either sounded fake or glaringly apparent that she was trying too hard.
In times like this, can't help but feel sorry for the phone  :D

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"You're right, I was too harsh. Just meet me at the café near your apartment tomorrow evening at 7. You have to turn up, or you will surely regret it.”
The Bunny
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: Aisacchan on April 25, 2010, 12:23:11 PM
Ahhhhh poor Gaki-san. I hope she's ok :cry:

AiEri scene is :heart: :heart: :heart: That so sweet from Aichan :wub:

As for JunLin part, it's amusing and I feel Koharu kinda left out XD
So Junjun also thrown in to the merry go round circle :twisted:
 
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Realizing that her poison-tongued senpai had discovered her surfing websites on how to kick the nicotine habit, Aika stuttered an almost incoherent reply in fear.
 
"I....I'm n-ot smo--kin..g. It's no-t..not...m--e..."
I feel sorry for Aika XD Will Sayu know about Reina smoking habit :?

@Aisacchan: Welcome!! Thanks for reading and liking my fic. I hope you will stay and read more of my stories ;)
Of course I will stay, Hammy-san :thumbsup
Actually I finished reading 'The Lines Are Blurred' couple days ago and now trying to cacth up with your other stories :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 16 (10-03-13)
Post by: Swtme03 on April 27, 2010, 01:12:21 AM

@Swtme03: Oh my gosh! A fellow Gaki fan!! *glomps* Where have you been all my life?!?! *is being dramatic* XD That being slapped emoticon is too cute! Reminds me of what I hope to see Risa do to Ai in the Fashionable play. Well, the bean IS supposed to be a meanie in it *winks* I LOVE how you did a mini summary of this story. I think I prefer reading it to one of my own chapters :D


*glomps back* I've been here, waiting for you and your awesome writing  :roll: Even tho you were here first  XD

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That being slapped emoticon is too cute! Reminds me of what I hope to see Risa do to Ai in the Fashionable play. Well, the bean IS supposed to be a meanie in it *winks*

REALLY looking forward to seeing the meanie Gaki in the play :inlove: I'm also curious about the outfits, since it is called Fashinable. Wanna see Gaki in more fedoras :inlove:

 XD


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I LOVE how you did a mini summary of this story. I think I prefer reading it to one of my own chapters :D

lol I'm glad you liked it  :)

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OMG!! Did Gaki make it back to the dressing room okay??? Or is she still in the stairwell????!! SOMEONE SAVE HER!!  :panic:

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“I’ve finally figured out my feelings. I can’t lose Gaki-san, but without you, I couldn’t…and I wouldn’t want to live on.”

AICHAN!!!  :on thumbb: DON'T YOU DARE GIVE UP YOUR FEELINGS ON GAKI!!! YOU BETTER GET TO THAT STAIRWELL AND SAVE HER RIGHT NOW!!

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“Uh-huh, you should totally tell Michishige-san how you feel.”

Alright LinLin!!  :on woohoo: You tell her exactly how it is. I agree 137%!!
Go tell her right now, JunJun!! Maybe it'll make her feel better that there's someone there who wants to make her happy.  :)

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Realizing that her poison-tongued senpai had discovered her surfing websites on how to kick the nicotine habit, Aika stuttered an almost incoherent reply in fear.
 
"I....I'm n-ot smo--kin..g. It's no-t..not...m--e..."

Oh god! I almost freaked cuz I believed for a few seconds that Aika smoked too!!  :shocked
But then I remembered about Reina  XD

Speaking of Reina, who the freak called her!??! I had a couple of people in mind, but then I started thinking of a bunch of other people it could be and I ended up confusing myself so I just gave up on guessing  :roll:
BUT I NEED SOME ANSWERS!!!
I NEED MORE CHAPTERS!!  :frustrated:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 17 (10-04-22)
Post by: oddball on May 04, 2010, 01:06:49 PM
Poor Jun, LinLin saw right through you, wonder if anyone else in the group knows?
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 17 (10-04-22)
Post by: Sukoshi on May 09, 2010, 11:57:50 AM
lol thanks for reminding me of the threat....I recently found this shop that has a giant freezer section dedicated to nattou.  I thought of it and you during the last chapter *does evil villain anime laugh* ho ho ho  :wahaha:
now before you tell me that you like nattou, keep in mind that by the time it gets to you, it will be unfresh...not that I would tell you it's unfresh....in fact I shall say no more  :mon evillaff:

*beware of mystery packages from an unidentified sender*   :ding:

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Merry Go Round

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I can’t lose Gaki-san, but without you, I couldn’t…and I wouldn’t want to live on.”

Eeeeeeeek Risa passed out and Ai chan's getting all scary thinking
You really are gonna leave Gaki san there for a week aren't you?! XD
*starts sweating*  :sweat:

and she still better not be in a coma!  I don't want to have to start calculating shipping costs!

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"Where did you pick it up from? When did you start to smoke Aika?"

lol Sayu thinks Aika's all smokey smokey?  that's a good one XD

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The tumbler of ice-cold tea that Aika had obtained upon Sayumi's requests fell from her hands and bounced twice on the carpeted floor before coming to a still laying on its side

lol you are so nice to the 8th gen.  Reina gets a bottle shattered on her but Aika's carpet doesn't even get wet XD

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"No one speaks to Reina like this. What the hell is wrong with you?!"

Hmm...I think it's Sayu calling at the end but my guesses have been so far off today  :depressed:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 18 (10-07-25)
Post by: lil_hamz on July 25, 2010, 01:09:28 PM
Is it shocking that I updated this fic? :lol:  I really wanna complete it. I hope I can *crossed fingers*
PS: I'm working on the replies to comments XD

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 18


It was past 7 pm in the evening and one would expect a quaint cafe in a part of town to be packed with office workers looking to settle their dinner. Nevertheless, it wasn't crowded in the establishment and Reina could immediately see the person she had come to meet. It wasn't difficult spotting someone with long ebony hair in a country where dyed brown hair was a popular option. Weaving her way through the cluster of tables and chairs, the scrawny individual slammed her bag down on the table and flopped into her seat, crossing her legs in a huff.

"What is it you want? And if Reina isn't convinced by the purpose of this meeting, Reina is leaving!"

Her statement was straight to the point and it was clear the proud female was anything but pleased by the prospect of their impending dialogue.

"First off, I think I should apologize for the earlier phone call. I admit I was rather harsh."

Sensing that her fellow Rokkie hadn't let down her guard from her obvious unfriendly body language, Sayumi heaved a sigh before speaking again.

"The reason I asked you out is to discuss your smoking problem."

Hearing that a third person knew about the addiction she had tried so hard to hide, a flabbergasted Reina exclaimed in disbelief.

"What the heck is this? Let's spill Reina's little secret week?!"

"What do you mean? Who else besides Aika knows about this?"

Realizing that it wasn't Risa who revealed her dependency on the nicotine stick like how she had previously thought, Reina's eyes widened and she slumped back into her chair in defeat.

"It wasn't...it wasn't Gaki-san who told you?"

Staring back at Reina in amazement, Sayumi shook her head, visibly shell-shocked. Exactly how many people in the group had already heard about this?

"Gaki-san knows?"

Resting her elbows on the table and dropping her head into them, Reina began to explain her predicament. When she had finished telling her story, the teaspoon that the bunny had used to stir her cup of tea slid from her fingers and clattered within the porcelain crockery.

"You slapped Gaki-san?? I can't believe so many things happened and you didn't tell me!"

"It's not like you announced your feelings for Eri. Reina discovered it on her own." 

Glaring at one another with neither person willing to back down, the two shot each other deadly looks until they both burst out laughing at the same time.

"We are really similar aren't we? Falling for someone who doesn't even know we exist in that way."

"Yeah..."

Agreeing to Sayumi's statement, Reina lifted her own cup and took a sip of the cool beverage to quench her thirst after speaking for such a lengthy duration.

"Why don't we hook up? I think we would make quite a pair."

The surprisingly remark caught Reina off guard and she choked on her drink, coughing violently into her hand. Accepting the paper napkin that her companion passed over, she dabbed at her mouth for a few seconds, not daring to look up into the bunny's eyes. It was only when she detected the melodious laughter of the other did she realize that the startling invitation was meant as a joke.

"In the end, the most innocent of us 3 is Reina. I would never have guessed..."

With a self deprecating smile on her face, the younger affirmed the observation.

"Reina is a fool when it comes to love."

Pausing in her speech, she rewound their previous conversation in her mind until the bit where Sayumi suggested they become a couple.

"Wait a sec, does this mean, you and Gaki-san are no longer..."

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The events in the past week kept swirling within Sayumi's mind and she couldn't help but think back to these issues, unable to believe that so many things had happened to their tightly knit group within a few months.

Ai and Eri were together, Risa and herself had fallen out of love before even getting the chance to begin a relationship with the person they felt something for. Reina had a smoking addiction and she not only confessed to Risa, but even slapped her.

"Wow...just wow..."

She didn't realize she had been talking to herself until someone's voice jolted her out of her reverie.

"What's so fascinating that you have to keep wow-ing?"

Jerking her head up in surprise when she heard the sudden question, Sayumi's jaw dropped when she saw and recognized the face of the person standing below her apartment building.

"Jun Jun? What are you doing here?"

Not replying her senpai immediately, the Chinese girl pondered her next move for a few seconds. Should she or shouldn't she come clean about what has been bugging her all this time? The revelation would undoubtedly come as a shock to Sayumi and she wondered what the kawaii girl's reaction would be.

"I have a problem and I was hoping you could help me with it."

Studying her face intently, Sayumi couldn't read her expression. Since she was the senior despite her younger age, Sayumi felt obliged to hear Jun Jun out and see if there was some way she could provide assistance. The night was chilly and it was getting late. Hence the variety idol offered her residence as the venue for their discussion.

"Why don't we go to my place? We can sit down and talk this out."

"I was hoping you would say that. The truth is, I've had this feeling ever since I entered Morning Musume."

Not exactly sure how she should respond to this statement, Sayumi cast the taller a sideways glance as they stepped side by side into the elevator that would bring them to her apartment.

"You could just give me a call. Instead of having to come all the way down."

"Some things have to be said face to face."

Her tone of voice was somewhat peculiar and Sayumi felt an unexplainable sense of dread when she thought about what Jun Jun might have to say. They continued their travel in the lift in an uncomfortable silence until the sudden action by the foreigner caused Sayumi to jump and her heart to stop beating. Jun Jun had placed a death grip on her upper arm and pulled her close.

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It wasn't clear what time in the day it was as the curtains were still drawn shut and the world outside was drenched in a solemn gray. The weather these few mornings had been unpredictable, scorching warm some days and bizarrely cold the next.

Inside a lavish apartment located in Tokyo city, two females lay side by side on the queen size bed in the master bedroom. One of them was still soundly asleep, or so the other thought. With her right arm beneath her partner such that it wound around her shoulders and came to rest on her abdomen. Her chin rested on the snoozing girl and she kissed at the top of her head gently, breathing in the sweet scent of her shampoo and taking in the natural freshness of her being.

However, the tears streaming from the corners of the elder's eyes marred this blissful image and she quaked ever so slightly from the effort of keeping her weeping quiet. She had spent the previous night making love to her girlfriend, a young lady so wonderful and pure that nothing should ever come close. Yet when she closed her eyes, all she could see was somebody else. And when they kissed, her tongue could only taste the strawberry flavoured lip gloss of another.

Why can't I stop wanting her? Why can't I stop feeling this way?

Unwittingly tightening her hold of the woman in her arms, Ai forced herself to block out every thought of her best friend from her mind. As long as she kept reminding herself that Risa didn't belong to her, she would eventually forget the feelings of affection that drove her insane whenever she noticed her with the middle Rokkie. She had to. After all, she had given Eri her word that she was the only one she loved. And that she was the person who gave her existence meaning.

I can't be so selfish to want her for myself. I already have Eri.

"I can't break my promise."

Mumbling these words to herself repeatedly, Ai slowly fell into a fitful sleep. Exhausted from staying up the entire night, she was too tired to realize that the turtle wasn't that deep in slumber and she was very much aware of the torment she was going through alone. Digging her nails further into her palms to prevent herself from sobbing audibly, Eri was overwhelmed by a stinging pain piercing her chest.

I've given you my body and my soul. Yet you've shut me out of your heart. Why can't you love me like how I love you?

Wriggling around in Ai's embrace such that she was now able to stare at the face of the woman she loved so deeply, Eri inched closer to Ai and kissed her softly on the cheek. But even in her state of rest, it was unmistakable that Ai had her reservations. It hurt Eri to see Ai in such agony and she wanted so much to be able to take away that pain. Nonetheless, she couldn't she couldn't bring herself to let Ai go.

"I'll do better. I'll work harder until you'll fall for me."

Tucking a strand of hair behind Ai's ear, Eri leaned in and nibbled tenderly.

"I'll die if I had to give you up."

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"Stop chasing me!"

"No way. I'm catching you no matter what!"

Risa had been walking down the quiet stretch of road from her home towards the nearest hospital when the joyous shrieks of children playing in the park caught her attention. Halting to stand by the edge of the playground, the twenty-two year old watched mesmerized at the pair of little girls running around the merry go round.

One was wearing shorts and the other was dressed in a frilly frock. As she observed their outfits and the manner by which she played, a memory emerged in her head and caused a small smile to tug at her lips.

~Flashback~

"Ai-chan! Stop chasing me!"

She was beginning to feel breathless from the amount of running they had been doing since arriving at the playground near Ai's home in Fukui.

"Haha, no way! This is payback for splashing me with water at the river earlier."

This was the first time Risa had been invited to go play at Ai's hometown and they had spent every minute laughing from the moment they stepped off the train from Tokyo. The elder had brought her guest to all the places she loved to roam as a child and these included the river where her sister lost her shoe, the tasty restaurant which sold her favorite Sauce Katsu and also the playground near her middle school where she spent most of her days after class.

"I can't run anymore Ai-chan."

"Then don't. Let me catch you. I won't let you go when I do."

Hearing those words made her freeze and stop in her tracks which allowed Ai to tackle her easily. The older laughed easily as they both fell to the sandy ground, with Risa becoming silent.

"It feels nice like this. Doesn't it?"

It sounded like an innocent question and it probably was when she said it. But to Risa, it held far too much meaning. Being caught in Ai's embrace, to feel her warm and comforting arms wrapped around her body made her flush. She was glad that Ai was hugging her from behind, or else the Fukui native would surely see that she was blushing. And if asked for the reason, she wouldn't be able to answer her. What could she say? That she had liked her for years? With it being the kind of affection which transcended normal friendship?

"Don't come so close to me Ai-chan. It makes it harder to not like you."

When she didn't loosen her hold around her waist, Risa rested her hands on the arms cuddling her and closed her eyes, relishing this moment where time seemed to stop. She wouldn't always have the opportunity to be held by Ai like this. For the future star of Morning Musume would one day meet a person who would sweep her off her feet and fall in love. And the bean was certain, that this person, would never be her.

~End of Flashback~

The sun had began to set, coloring the evening sky with a brilliant orangey glow. The mothers of the kids had come to pick them up, returning the park to it's original tranquil state. Maybe it was due to the storm brewing in the distance resulting in the park to be void of any other activity. Whatever the cause, Risa was glad she was alone. As she had fallen to her knees, sobbing heartbreakingly at her fate of being kept apart from the woman she loved.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 18 (100725)
Post by: rndmnwierd on July 25, 2010, 02:13:46 PM
 :pleeease:  So much pain in this one! :imdead: Augh, I can't take the waiting for more chapters!

Do I sense a hint of Tanashige there? Maybe a bit of a beginning or something. And I guess Risa was okay after all? Since she's walking under her own power or is she actually in a coma and dreaming it all? And don't even get me started on poor Ai and ominous Eri!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 18 (100725)
Post by: kuro808 on July 25, 2010, 10:23:31 PM
Well more like relieved that you updated the fic  :lol:

rndmy hit it on the head on what I felt, just a lot of pain in this chapter

good job :thumbsup
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 18 (100725)
Post by: Swtme03 on July 26, 2010, 04:35:32 AM
Holy crap~!!!  :cry: :cry:
My heart was breaking throughout this chapter!!  :bleed eyes:
You never fail to amaze me with you work  :heart: So much suspense!!  :panic:
UGGHH!!!! I just can't get enough!!  :wub: :inlove:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 18 (100725)
Post by: badsaints on July 26, 2010, 08:50:44 AM
Ooooh yay~ an update!


I have to agree with the others. This is damn sad chapter :cry:

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"Why don't we hook up? I think we would make quite a pair."
Actually that would a GREAT idea, though I don't think that would happen in this fic :P

So Reina gonna go after Risa full on now that she knows she isn't dating the bunny? Lets see how the proud yankii will apologise to the bean and redeem herself. Oh make it a sexy scene at that :lol: TanaGaki raburabu :wub:

Jun is confessing? Gawd Girl! Why do you leave us hanging? Update soon! :w00t:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 19 (100807)
Post by: lil_hamz on August 06, 2010, 06:28:58 PM
MGR 17

@kuro-san: Thanks for the encouragement. I’ll try but it’s hard.

@rnd: Give me ideas? Cuz I’m running out of them.

@Sticky: I didn’t blame you at all? And I almost called you Ame again but I remembered the reason not to. Even if it’s not a best friend it’s possible for that line to be blurry too.

@BS: Me? Slap you? Nah, I can’t slap anyone but myself.

@kR: I think that phone should be happy that it gets touched by Reina so much. How did you guess it was Sayu?

@Aisacchan: Did you like any of the other stories? I hope so though I’m not a good writer.

@Swtme03: Gaki was so darn hawt wearing fedoras. Lol, thanks for your long and very nice comment. Made me really happy.

@Hashire-san: Gaki still lives so I think I’m kinda nice to her?

@oddball: No one knows yet. I’ll drop a hint here. Lin Lin might not be entirely correct in her guess.

@Sukoshi-chan: Awww shucks, you thought of me? Really? *blushes* Lol, sorry I was being lame. I thought nattou was fermented? So it’s not fresh anyway? You were right about Sayu. Since you are so great at fortune-telling, maybe you can help me out with the crap in my life?

MGR 18

@rnd: So much pain eh? It can’t compare to the pain inside of me :cry: Just kidding…though that wasn’t funny at all huh? Damn my lousy humor skills.

@kuro-san: Thanks for still reading. I wasn’t expecting anyone to wanna read this again. A big gomen for owing you so many comments. I wasn’t in the commenting mood that period. But I think I’m getting back into it so I’ll be reading replying in your threads when I can :)

@Swtme03: You praise me too much. I’m not even half as good as what you make me out to be. Thanks though, it means a lot :oops:

@BS: Sexy TanaGaki? Risa doesn’t really look like the kind who would initiate a hawt sexy scene :P We’ll have to count on Reina then. 

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 19
 
 
Tilting my head sideways to glance at you, I observed how silent you were as you stared out the window of the taxi we were in. I had suggested we spend our free day together at Disneyland and you didn't decline the offer. Although I had started on our trip with buoyant feelings of jubilation, the happiness I had felt quickly disappeared when I began to sense your less than enthusiastic attitude. You had not spoken more than ten lines from the moment we woke up this morning and I had hoped that it was because you were tired out from last night's activity. Yet in the back of my mind, I knew this was not really the case.
 
I have you physically here with me, but your heart isn’t.
 
I could feel the ends of my eyes beginning to grow moist as my vision blurred from the impending tears. Squeezing my eyes shut, I refused to allow these tears of self-pity to fall. Kamei Eri is a strong girl and if I could overcome my low self-esteem to become a member of Morning Musume, I believe that I could one day bypass the numerous barriers surrounding your heart. 
 
As our cab headed towards your apartment from the amusement park, the overcast sky finally opened up and the rain began to fall in torrent like drops. I could hear the thunderous noise of the water hitting onto the roof of the vehicle we were in, mimicking the wave of emotions exploding within my frail frame. Thoroughly caught up in my own thoughts, I was only jolted out of my reverie when your panic filled voice resonated throughout the enclosed space.



"Stop the car!" 



Upon hearing the command barked out in such an agitated manner, the driver instantly obeyed and slammed on the brakes, bringing the small taxi to a dead stop. In the following second, you threw open the door and jumped out, sprinting like mad into the center of the storm.



"AI-CHAN!"



I yelled into the distance, completely helpless, as your shadowy figure grew tinier and further away from me. I didn't know why you didn’t turn back despite my desperate calls. Didn’t you hear my screams above the howling of the winds? Or was I that insignificant as compared to the person you were running towards.

Despite wishing that the cause of your bizarre actions were completely justifiable, I could no longer pretend that you truly loved me. Glancing down at my open palms that were resting on my lap, I retracted my fingers, clenching my hands into tight fists.
 
Even when our hands were linked, I couldn't feel your love for me.



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My pace slowed down as I trotted to a jog. Twisting my head in various directions, I scanned my surroundings frantically for the silhouette of the person I was seeking. It was only for a mere second when I caught a glimpse of your drenched form flashing past the window but I knew it was you. I would never mistake you for anyone else.

As I widened the area of my search, a million questions ran through my mind. Why were you in the mist of a downpour without an umbrella? Why were you walking alone in the direction away from the park near your home? Have you recovered from your injuries from the previous day and was there something bothering you?



Please let me find you Gaki-san.



I muttered under my breath, praying sincerely that god would allow me to chance upon the person I wanted so much to see. 



I just want to make sure you are okay.



"Ai-chan!"



My first thought was of the person who had been beside me for years, the one blessed with kind brown eyes and who had the most brilliant smile I had ever seen. Twirling around immediately upon hearing my name, a huge smile lit up on my face but disappeared just as quickly when I focused on the owner of a blue umbrella.



"Eri..."



My girlfriend strolled up to me, one hand supporting the brolly while the other clutched at the loose ends of her jacket. Strands of her hair stuck to her face and there were several dark patches staining her attire, no doubt the work of the torrential rain beating sideways beyond the coverage of her shelter. 



"What are you doing here? Get back into the cab!"



I grabbed onto her elbows, steering her in the direction where I had come from, assuming that the taxi would still be waiting. What I didn't expect was Eri to tug on my wrist, shaking her head and forcing a smile.



"The taxi already left. It's okay Ai-chan, I'll accompany you to look for Gaki-san."



Her words made my breathe catch in my throat and I stared at her in shock, unable to say anything in response. 



"Eri..."



Pulling her in for a hug, I wrapped my arms around her shivering torso. Had you known all along? That I couldn't love you like I should. But you still agreed to each and every one of my demands, even when you were hurt in the near fatal accident. You never once refused my advances nor told me that you weren't in the mood.



"Why must you treat me so well. I don't deserve it."



"I love you Ai-chan. There's no right or wrong when it comes to love. I'll keep on giving you my all, even if you can't return any of it."



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I peeled off my soaked outer coat and allowed it to fall to the floor with a splat. Vaguely aware that I had to remove my shoes, I kicked them away, not caring where they flew. Trudging wearily towards the bathroom, I leaned heavily on the sink and brought my gaze up to the mirror positioned above. The image of a pale female with whitish lips and reddish eyes stared unblinkingly back at me and it was clear that I was indeed in a sorry state.



"Stop thinking about her! She doesn't belong to you, she doesn't even like you!"



I screamed at the image of myself, pounding my fists against the ceramic surface. Exerting every ounce of my strength in the hope that I would be able to find release through this method, I abused my limbs until they were painfully sore. 



"You can't compare to any of those people going after her and you definitely can't compare to Kame!"



The throbbing from my hands was momentarily forgotten when a stinging pain stabbed through my right chest and I slumped over from the pain, sucking in a sharp breathe of air in the process. Shifting one hand over the aching area to grip at the garment I was wearing, I choked back my sobs, attempting to ease the ache but failing miserably.

This routine has become a daily affair for me recently and I didn't know if the agony was caused by the hurt I felt whenever I thought about you or was it due to something else. Frankly at this point in my life, nothing else seemed to matter much for you were of utmost priority to me. It might not be a bad thing if the chest pain, the blacking out or white spots in my vision turned out to be something serious. Maybe if I died, I wouldn't be so tortured by these feelings of anguish whenever you appeared in my thoughts. Coming to this conclusion was the reason I decided against visiting the hospital earlier. 



Sometimes when I’m outside, my thoughts drift to you and I cry because I can’t do anything about it. I’m reminded of how I can’t have you to myself, or that I can’t do a thing to soothe your pain and sorrow. I’ve noticed that you seem troubled but I didn’t dare show my concern. What would Kame think? And most importantly, who am I to you to poke my nose into your business. 

“You are a complete idiot to be crying for her when she doesn't know how you feel."



Despite scolding myself for my stupidity, I cried harder when a fresh round of tears sprung to my eyes, streaming down my cheeks. I hate myself for weeping over you so often. It’s takes so little to make me tear whenever it’s something involving you.

Pushing myself up to meet the mirror once again, I swallowed back my tears and the urge of wanting to see you, of wanting to hold you every time we see each other. I absolutely detest myself, despising my weakness and failure as a person in general.

"YOU'RE PATHETIC!"



Smashing my curled fist into the glass, I felt the pieces shatter and a single shard graze past my face. In the broken reflection of the polished surface, a thin red line emerged and blood flowed freely from the center of the cracked glass.

I wish for the day I no longer feel so strongly for you.

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*Ding dong*



*Knocking*




"Hello? Gaki-san!"



"Gaki-san are you there?"



A certain yankii was standing outside her senpai's home, knocking rather loudly as she waited for someone, anyone, to acknowledge her presence. She was positive she had heard the ringing sound of Risa's cellphone from within the apartment when she called her earlier. That would mean that the sub-leader was home, right? Then why was it that the older girl didn't answer the door?

Not understanding the events that were taking place before her at that very instant, Reina sighed and backed away from the still shut entry.



"Perhaps Reina heard wrongly." 



Downstairs of the condominium complex, the self-proclaimed leader of High-King walked away from the structure, turning back every now and then to see if she could catch sight of Risa who might have left her cell phone at home while taking a short trip to the nearby convenience store. Sadly, her hopes were dashed when none of the figures approaching took the shape of the bean. 



However, the familiar view of another person she was acquainted with appeared in the distance and Reina gasped in surprise when the person ran up to her. 



"Tanaka-san, what are you doing here?"



"I could ask the same of you Jun."



As if realizing that something was off about the petite girl, Jun took a chance and grabbed her hand. Seeing that the younger girl didn't resist, she continued speaking.

"If Tanaka-san needs anything I'll do my best to help!"



Gazing up at the much taller girl, Reina returned the smile. The Chinese foreigner had a calming aura around her and somehow that made Reina feel safe to have her companionship. Since she couldn't get a hold of Risa, maybe Jun would make a suitable choice as well. Deciding that she could trust her with her secret, which wasn't much of one going by the number of people who already knew about her habit, Reina asked.      



"Would you want to keep me company at a nicotine anonymous meeting?"
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 19 (100807)
Post by: rndmnwierd on August 06, 2010, 08:06:56 PM
Ah, poor Eri, she finally has to let go of Ai. Or does she? She didn't go postal, so that's a plus.

Ah, poor mirror, being broken by the pain of love. At least it got to bite back a little, though I wonder how Risa will hide that cut.

Ah, poor me, I was hoping for some solid Tanagaki, maybe a little 'help me forget about Ai' lovin.' But, ReiJun? Was Jun in love with Sayu? Or Reina at first? At least the kitty is doing something about her habit, but she always seems to be missing Risa when the other girl needs someone the most.

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So much pain eh? It can’t compare to the pain inside of me :cry: Just kidding…though that wasn’t funny at all huh? Damn my lousy humor skills.
No, not funny, but I'll forgive you because of a new update *patpats*
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 19 (100807)
Post by: kuro808 on August 07, 2010, 06:21:54 AM
don't worry the commenting, I will have one of those  droning moments soon :D

the fact that Eri is letting go is a good thing and Reina seeing Jun was a good thing :)
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 19 (100807)
Post by: Sukoshi on August 11, 2010, 02:17:26 PM
I had meant to read this a couple of days ago but then the "announcement" happened....my mind still hasn't settled all that much but what better distraction than the world of fiction right? 

chapter 19 starto~

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"Stop the car!" 



Upon hearing the command barked out in such an agitated manner, the driver instantly obeyed and slammed on the brakes, bringing the small taxi to a dead stop.

the taxi stopped.  no one injured.  Hammy san+1  :wub:

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Please let me find you Gaki-san.



GAKI SAN!?  but but that can't be....unless!! no no brain...it isn't Gaki's wandering spirit from her comatose state, hammy doesn't do that in her fics...wait...yes she does! :O

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The throbbing from my hands was momentarily forgotten when a stinging pain stabbed through my right chest and I slumped over from the pain, sucking in a sharp breathe of air in the process.

*gasp* hasn't the girl suffered enough?!  What MORE did you do to Gaki san !!!!!?!??!     :shock:

wait...so Gaki san's not unconscious in a stairwell??....I'm missing something here....OMG...I'm missing a chapter!   Wah!...I could have sworn I read 18...but then again I didn't leave a comment...ah baka Sukoshi...this is what I get for saving my favourite stories for a rainy date...  :mon wtf: well erm I'll rewind later :sweat:

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In the broken reflection of the polished surface, a thin red line emerged and blood flowed freely from the center of the cracked glass.

You know...I think I'll have to start adding glass to my list of fiction-fears alongside taxis.

*rewind time*

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"What is it you want? And if Reina isn't convinced by the purpose of this meeting, Reina is leaving!"

lol just a couple of lines in and it's already so awesome!  love the line!  Hammy san+2   :wub: :wub:

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"Why don't we hook up? I think we would make quite a pair."

Yes!  Please do =D

~the flash back~

:shy2: :shy2: :shy2:
 
love it. love it. love it.

*after chapter 18 and 19* 

oh! okay, so that's what happened!  So Gaki being in a coma was just part of my imagination from chapter 17   :sweat:  well then you have saved yourself from the nattou attack.  and yes it does go bad even though it's fermented..if you were living in the Michishige residence..Michishige mama would lie and tell you, "you can still eat it a day or two after it's expiration date" XD

ah... I think I was suppose to offer you some fortune-telling advice?  well, I'll just tell you...getting advice from me is actually worse than seeking answers from a fortune cookie XD  All I'll say is no matter how bad life gets, there will always, always be little moments of happiness that come along...that make things feel a little easier to bare and remind you to keep moving forward so that one day you can stumble upon a greater happiness.

hmm...that was really corny I guess..but I believe it =)   After all I'm here today, enjoying my little moment of happiness reading your story.   :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 19 (100807)
Post by: badsaints on August 12, 2010, 02:47:47 PM
Normally I'll be against Kame coming between TakaGaki. It's hard not to root for the turtle this time though, especially seeing how accepting the turtle is towards the situation. Rival aside, Risa is also Eri's close friend and there's no way the kind Kame will let Risa suffer, even if it's in her own expense.

I don't know what to say about Risa though. She's too depressed to the point of psychotic? :huhuh

There's a rehab to quit smoking? :O Good for Reina :D This will be her nice surprise for Risa later
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 20 + AiGaki ThemeVid (100818)
Post by: lil_hamz on August 17, 2010, 06:57:20 PM
Editing this post cuz I should have posted chapter 20 before the OPV? XD

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 20


The short break that the girls enjoyed was over in a flash and on Monday morning, all of them were required to return to the office and attend the first reading of their latest play, 'Fashionable.' This time the musical revolved around a clothing store and the people who worked in it. 

Astonishingly the first arrival to the designated dressing room that day wasn't the regular "early" member of the group. It was instead a certain bunny. Entering the room with her bag hanging loosely from her shoulder, Sayumi headed for the nearest chair and dropped herself on it. Leaving her duffel on the floor beside her feet, she laid her left elbow on the table and rested her chin on her open palm.

"I need to talk to someone...or I might just go crazy!"

There was no one else nearby to hear or reply her statement. And this was precisely why she chose to let out her grievances at this juncture. Even though she really wished to be able to discuss her problem with anyone who might listen, she knew the potential troubles it could bring should that someone involved in the issue found out. Someone like her fellow Rokkie.

*Sigh*

It was at this moment when a couple of her juniors tumbled in through the door creating uproar with their chatter and shrieks. The ruckus conveniently covered Sayumi's audible sighs, keeping her woes a secret for now. Watching the trio of girls, she counted them off mentally.

Mitsui, Lin Lin and Koha-pinku. Where is Jun Jun?

As soon as her thoughts fell on the oldest kouhai, Sayumi's memory evoked a scene which made her shake her head unintentionally.

~Flashback~

"I was hoping you would say that. The truth is, I've had this feeling ever since I entered Morning Musume."

Not exactly sure how she should respond to this statement, Sayumi cast the taller a sideways glance as they stepped side by side into the elevator that would bring them to her apartment.

"You could just give me a call. Instead of having to come all the way down."

"Some things have to be said face to face."

Her tone of voice was somewhat peculiar and Sayumi felt an unexplainable sense of dread when she thought about what Jun Jun might have to say. They continued their travel in the lift in an uncomfortable silence until the sudden action by the foreigner caused Sayumi to jump and her heart to stop beating. Jun Jun had placed a death grip on her upper arm and pulled her close.

"Jun Jun! What are you doing?!"

The shock and fear was evident in the voice of the cutest member as her eyes widened to twice their usual size. Sensing that the sole other occupant in the elevator wasn't going to loosen her hold, she struggled to free herself. Her efforts only resulted in the taller shoving her against the wall and pinning her in between her arms. 

"Don't force me to do this. I only want Tanaka-san to be happy."

Despite her compromising position, Sayumi couldn't help her brain catching on to the words "Tanaka-san."

"Reina?! What has she got to do with this?"

Her trashing ceased shortly as she shouted out the question, not noticing that Jun Jun had began tearing.

"I like Tanaka-san okay? I like her!"

The Chinese girl's grip finally slacked which allowed her victim to slither her sore wrist out of the iron grasp.

"Wasn't this about me? Isn't the person you like, me?"

The astounding statement made the one who had been looking down raise her head and stare with mouth agape at her infuriated senpai.

"Michishige-san is cute but no, it's Tanaka-san I like."

"But...but...weren't you copying my hair... my dressing..."

The elevator doors slid open following the ding of the lift announcing their arrival at the preset floor. Exchanging another glance, the pair stepped out of the structure and stood in the space just outside before resuming their conversation.

"If my actions misled you, I'm terribly sorry. But the reason why I came here today was to ask you to stop seeing Niigaki-san. Please stay away from her so Tanaka-san has a chance. She really likes Niigaki-san."

When Jun Jun's admission sank in, Sayumi processed the group's relationship in her head. Apparently, most of the 56kkies had someone who loved them unconditionally. Everyone, except her that is. What she didn't know was that Ai's feelings for Eri were already wavering.

"Why does everyone think I'm clinging to Gaki-san? I already told Reina it wasn't like that! What me and Gaki-san share, it's a form of support. I love her as a close friend and team mate. But nothing more." I wish it was something more. Then both her and I wouldn't be so tormented by this thing called love.

"So Tanaka-san knows she can try getting together with Niigaki-san. I see. Thank you Michishige-san."

Backing a short distance away from Sayumi, she bowed to show her appreciation before re-entering another lift which had coincidentally opened up.

"Jun Jun! I've not finished talking!"

Nevertheless there was no respond from the other as the elevator doors had glided close again.

~End of Flashback~

"That stupid girl. She was only supposed to learn Japanese and how to sing and dance. Not how to fall in love... with the wrong person."

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When it was almost time for the commencement of the script reading, everyone shuffled into the room and sat in various chairs around the U-shaped conference table.

Every now and then, Eri stole glances at her girlfriend. As she had predicted, she was fully immersed in her role, utterly convincing as her character of  the kind hearted protagonist, Coco. When it was Risa's turn to read, the younger half of GakiKame detected that something was off about her radio show partner.

Having spent so much time with the bean, she was positive that Risa wasn't at a hundred percent. And why was she wearing her jacket with the sleeves completely hiding her hands? It wasn’t that cold in the room. In fact the temperature in summer now was so hot that the air-conditioning was barely enough to battle the heatwave.

"Let's take a 15 minute break! I think we need it."

Closing her script and placing it down on the table, Ai suggested, lifting her bottle of water and taking a few sips from it. While her words weren't directed at anyone in particular, Eri suspected she had called for the intermission as she too had noticed that Risa kept knitting her eyebrows and blinking at her papers.

She didn't want to ask Ai to go and speak with Risa for it hurt too much. Yet she knew the leader wouldn't be at ease unless she knew for sure that her ever dependable second in command was alright.

"Ai-chan, I think something's up with Gaki-san. Maybe you should go talk to her."

Narrowing her eyes at her own stack of documents filled with random doodling, Eri kept her line of sight on a specific turtle scrawled on the top right hand section of her script’s index page. She might not be able to stop her tears from falling and it was best if Ai didn't see them. She didn't want her lover to feel guilty in spite of her betrayal.

It took some convincing before Ai relented and stood up from her seat, crossing the length of the room to where Risa was sitting by herself on the couch.

When she was sure Ai could no longer see her clearly, Eri let the lone tear she had been holding in slid from her eye. Folding her arms and laying them on the table, she set her head down on them and pretended to be taking a nap. No one would come and talk to her if they thought she was sleeping. And it wouldn't be a surprise for her to be resting. She had always been known as the aho sleepyhead anyway.

However, Eri didn't know that her heart wasn't the only one that was breaking in this instant. Another person who was secretly watching her was hurting as well.

Oh Eririn, why do you treat yourself so cruelly?

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Please just walk by without acknowledging me.
Please don't even glance this way.


Unfortunately, Risa's prayers weren't answered as the person she wanted to have the least contact with had come to sit down beside her on the single two seater couch positioned in the far end of the room.

"Are you alright? You seem tired."

"Never felt better. I have to go Ai-chan. See you later after the break."

Grabbing her belongings hastily from where she had left them, Risa didn't realize that something had fallen out of the unzipped compartment of her gym bag and slipped between the cushions of the sofa.

I've closed my heart, I've hid my tears, please don't make my resolve crumble.

Sprinting away from where Ai was to a deserted part of the building, Risa threw her bag against the wall and fell to her kneels, letting all her pent up emotion burst out at once. She used the sleeve of her jacket to wipe at the tears soaking her face and as she did so, her right sleeve rode up her arm to reveal her fist wrapped in a bandage. Blood had already seeped through the folds, tainting the pure white fabric with patches of a crimson red.

I gave my love away. What I have left is only the memories I cherish alone.

Back in the group’s resting area, Ai discovered the partially hidden hardcover book and flipped open to a random page, hoping to determine the owner of the diary.

Even though you are far away...

...I wish you happiness.

I bury my love, deep within my heart.

For you can never know, how I will always love you.


Shutting the book bound in a red casing and biting down on her quivering lip, Ai hugged the journal to her chest. She had to find her, she had to tell her that she was feeling the same way.   

“Why didn’t you tell me, Risa-chan...”

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Merry Go Round

AiGaki themevideo

This one is done to Risa's POV. Enjoy

[OPV] AiGaki - By Myself (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_lucqaz7cHw#ws)


Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 20 + AiGaki Theme Video (100818)
Post by: Sukoshi on August 18, 2010, 10:56:20 AM
Between Can You Hear Me and By Myself I'm all  :cry: :cry: :cry:
so beautiful as always!  I watched Can You Hear Me endless times and now I've fallen in love with By Myself too.   Time to rewatch again and then read~  :heart:

(oh yes and I'm on edit round 3 of my new kameshige rokkies opv...there just maybe hope that it sees the light of day) XD

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Her efforts only resulted in the taller shoving her against the wall and pinning her in between her arms.

LOL for a second I thought Junjun was gonna go all sexy-dude-from-shoujo-manga-forcibly-kissing-shoujo-girl-against-a-wall on Sayu XD  In which case, Sayu would have no choice but to instantly fall in love with Jun.....    :shock:

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"Don't force me to do this. I only want Tanaka-san to be happy."

oh but righto!  Can't forget about Reina :sweat:

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Apparently, most of the 56kkies had someone who loved them unconditionally. Everyone, except her that is.

That statement is funny yet crushingly sad at the same time  :on lol:  poor Sayu XD

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Risa didn't realize that something had fallen out of the unzipped compartment of her gym bag and slipped between the cushions of the sofa.

If this were a kdrama, the item that slipped between the cushions would probably be a bottle of pills!

oh! but luckily in this Hammy drama, it's only a book XD  Though Gaki did need to go to the hospital, so the pills would have actually been better?! (for Gaki that is) but then Ai chan would have to go investigate the pills and find out from a random doctor that Gaki san only has x amount of months to live!  omg how horrible!

Should I be glad this is a Hammy-fic instead of a kdrama or Sukoshi's mind?  I can't tell XD  I will need some convincing  :lol:

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(Yay! 6 complete re-edits and 1 red screen of death later, my new kameshigexTanaShigexTanaKame rokkies opv is done!) XD

youtube.com/watch?v=-dbbEX89KJs
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 20 + AiGaki Theme Video (100818)
Post by: rndmnwierd on August 18, 2010, 02:10:06 PM
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"I like Tanaka-san okay? I like her!"
*stumble* W-What?! Was this mentioned somewhere before?

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Apparently, most of the 56kkies had someone who loved them unconditionally. Everyone, except her that is.
Let's see
Jun Jun :heart: > Reina
Reina  :heart: > Risa
Risa :heart: > Ai
Ai (as far as Sayu knows) :heart: > Eri
Eri :heart: > Ai
Umm, wow. How sadly true... Poor Sayu, but lol. :lol:


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"Why does everyone think I'm clinging to Gaki-san?
Um, cause you kissed in front of them... :doh:

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"That stupid girl. She was only supposed to learn Japanese and how to sing and dance. Not how to fall in love... with the wrong person."
... Sayu  :heart: > Jun?

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She didn't want to ask Ai to go and speak with Risa for it hurt too much. Yet she knew the leader wouldn't be at ease unless she knew for sure that her ever dependable second in command was alright.

"Ai-chan, I think something's up with Gaki-san. Maybe you should go talk to her."
ERI!! :pleeease: She's a good girl...

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Narrowing her eyes at her own stack of documents filled with random doodling,
  :doh: Eri! :rofl: Aho...

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Eri let the lone tear she had been holding in slid from her eye.
.... ERI!! :fainted: Poor girl...

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Oh Eririn, why do you treat yourself so cruelly?
Sayu?

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She used the sleeve of her jacket to wipe at the tears soaking her face and as she did so, her right sleeve rode up her arm to reveal her fist wrapped in a bandage. Blood had already seeped through the folds, tainting the pure white fabric with patches of a crimson red.
I can't help but laugh a little, this poor girl has been through that bloody stomach thing, a head injury and now her highly visible hands are cut up? Oh Hammykins, I really love you, you make it seem feasible.

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“Why didn’t you tell me, Risa-chan...”
And Ai knows Risa's feelings for sure.  The question is, what will she do about it?


Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 21 (100901)
Post by: lil_hamz on September 01, 2010, 12:51:09 PM
MGR 19

@rnd: Risa hid the cut with her jacket. But you will see from the latest chapter, someone will find out ;)

@Kuro-san: Has Eri really let go?? :smhid

@Sukoshi-chan: Hee hee, you never let me forgot about the taxi do you. Awww, that was *sniff* so *sniff* SWEET!! *bawls* Don't play with my little tender heart :cry:

@BS: Don't make me doubt myself. I'm pretty sure there is such rehab. And the funny thing was I actually saw such a banner a few days after I posted this? :lol:

MGR 20

@Sukoshi-chan: I saw that OPV!! You genius you. I said not to play with me heart didn't I? But you made me cry so many times. Lol, but ah ha! This isn't a Kdrama. Though in Hammy's world, it could come close :P

@rnd: I see you too have gotten surprised at the JJ curveball. Why are you laughing at Sayu? The poor girl is unwanted. That should earn her some tears? Seeing that you're the 2nd person to ask if Sayu loves JJ due to that line, I should clear it up. She doesn't. But she knows that Reina likes Risa and might not like JJ back hence she thought that way. :(


Merry Go Round
Chapter 21


"Where is it?"

Shaking the contents of her bag out onto the dresser in an agitated manner, Risa cursed under her breath when she could not find her single most personal possession. The diary in which she recorded her daily happenings and innermost feelings was missing from the usual compartment in her gym bag.

"Damn it!"

Slamming her fist down on the hard polished surface of the furniture in exasperation, she forgot about the injury sustained to her hand the previous night and almost collapsed from the intense pain that shot up her entire arm in that instant. Holding her broken limp close to her chest, she took in deep gasps of air to ease the stinging sensation. In the same second, the melody from her cell phone sounded and the lights on the device flashed, signalling that a new message had come in.

Making her way over to the gadget lying at the far end of the dresser, Risa picked it up with difficulty and flipped it open.

Your diary is with me. You can pick it up from my apartment - Ai

Although she knew that Ai was a person who respected other's privacy, Risa couldn't help but feel worried that she might have accidentally stumbled upon the entries which stated how deeply she felt for the older girl. And if she found out, the bean was terrified of the repercussions. What would Ai think? Would she be too sickened and scared of her to even want to see her again?

It was precisely this fear of having Ai look at her differently after finding out about her affections which made Risa decide to bear the pain of seeing her with someone else. If hiding her love was the only way she could keep seeing Ai on a regular basis and to be still a part of her life, then so be it. But should Ai discover that her best friend had been lying all along, Risa didn't know what her reaction would be. And this ambiguity freaked her out. She hated not being prepared. And at this juncture, she was facing one of the biggest uncertainties of her life.

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"Gaki-san."

Standing from behind the door, her face partially hidden by the shadows cast by the sturdy structure, Ai acknowledged her sub-leader’s presence and stepped away to allow the younger girl entry. Inside, she noticed that Risa hadn't changed out of the clothes she had worn at practise earlier. Was she that anxious to collect her diary that she couldn’t even be bothered to take a bath and change after reaching home? Judging from the weariness apparent on her face, she suspected Risa hadn't stopped for a break since that morning.

"Do you have my diary? Could I please have it back?"

The abrupt request shocked Ai. Why did her usually polite friend skip the niceties and practically demand for her property? Unsure of how she should reply, Ai wordlessly pointed to the coffee table where the book bound in red material was placed. It wouldn't be an exaggeration to say that Risa basically flew over the sofa to get to her diary and clung onto it with a death grip after she had it back in her possession.

"Thanks for keeping it for me. I'll be leaving now."

"Wait!"

Before Risa could turn to leave, Ai was beside her in a flash. And the older girl had reached out for the bean's hand, wanting to halt her exit. What happened next was the taller shrinking her arm back instantaneously with her face scrunched up in pain. Sensing stickiness on her fingers, Ai looked down to find them covered with a red fluid.

"Risa! You're bleeding!"

Using both hands to grab at the stunned individual, Ai was careful not to aggravate her injuries as she brought the cut limb nearer to her face to inspect the severity of the lesions.

"How did you hurt yourself like this?"

It was less of a question than a command and it was clear that the elder was pissed. Her eyes were blazing with fury and she felt so much anger at seeing the current state that Risa was in. She herself could not explain why she was so angry that her friend didn't take better care of herself.

"Accident. It's really nothing."

"Nothing? You call this nothing?! You could bleed to death!"

Steering Risa to sit down on the couch, Ai ordered her to stay put while she went to fetch the medical kit. Despite her protests that everything was fine, Ai undid the stained bandages when she returned and examined the wound meticulously. There were a number of cuts and none of them were properly treated. Infection seemed to have begun to set in and if things got worse, she might even lose a finger or two.

"Dear god Risa, how did you do this to yourself?"

Not looking up from cleaning the hand which she had gently rested on her lap with antiseptic lotion, Ai furrowed her brows, totally concentrated on her task at hand.

"Broke a mirror."

Was the mumbled reply. Thinking that Ai wouldn't detect her staring due to having her head bent low, Risa took the opportunity to admire her profile, quietly gazing at her long lashes, beautiful eyes, cute nose and plush lips. This was the person she was in love with, sitting so close to her that she could almost smell her scent. And it took every restrain Risa had within herself to not reach out and pull her in a hug.

I love you so much. And it kills me to not be able to tell you.

When Ai looked up all of a sudden, their eyes inevitably met and Risa tore away her gaze immediately, filled with immense guilt at having been caught staring.

"It's late I better go."

Standing up from the sofa, Risa crossed the length of the room to the exit without waiting for Ai's response. In her haste to flee the confine space where even breathing in the same air was too much to take, she ignored Ai's cries for her to stay. She didn't care that her hand wasn't wrapped up yet or that Ai's voice sounded peculiar. She couldn't afford to stop now. Not when things have come so far. Ai was already in a relationship with Eri. And she couldn't hurt the turtle, not when she was her other good friend.

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"Gaki-san!"

Ai stumbled barefooted out onto the walkway in her skimpy attire of shorts and a tank top. She didn't waste any time putting on a jacket or wearing slippers in her haste to catch up to Risa. Glancing both ways in the dimly lit street, she could no longer catch sight of her companion for the past nine years.

"Gaki-san! Come back!"

Tears sprang to her eyes as she ran blindly, not knowing where to start looking for the person she only recently realized she loved. Her feet were cold against the icy pavements and she shivered uncontrollably from the howling winds. But still Ai didn't head back to the warmth and safety of her home. She needed to find Risa, she wanted to tell her how she felt the same way for her and that her resolution would not be deterred. As for Eri, they could make it up to her in other ways. Let them be selfish for once, and love each other regardless of the people they might hurt in the process.

"Let me tell you I love you. Let me say it."

The tears fell like rain and her eyes stung from the never-ending wave of emotion racking her body with sobs. Nevertheless, she couldn't locate her, she couldn't find her soul mate in the darkness of the night. So caught up in her search, Ai never noticed that a group of men huddled around a trash bin smoking had set their sights on her. They focused their leery gazes on her taunt midriff, exposed by the winds lifting her top. As well as her tight butt and shapely legs hardly covered by her shorts. But most of all, they drooled at her gorgeous face made even more enticing under the moonlit night.

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"Why did I leave without a word. Did I hurt Ai's feelings?"

As she strolled further away from the lavish apartment block, Risa began to get second thoughts about her callous behaviour. Her leader and friend had kindly kept her diary for her and even tried to nurse her injuries. Yet all she did was push her away and act so heartlessly.
 
"You are a total jerk Niigaki Risa."

Blaming herself for being so insensitive, Risa turned back and started sprinting towards the apartment block she had grown so familiar with. As she approached the area where the upper middle class district was located, Risa caught a glimpse of some men dragging someone towards a car with the engine left running. Squinting from where she stood, she realized to her horror that the person they were currently loading into the vehicle was Ai!
 
Running across the road without bothering to check for impending traffic, Risa rushed forwards and pushed with all her strength against the man carrying Ai. Caught by surprise, the stocky man tripped and lost his grip on his captive, allowing her to fall limp into Risa's awaiting arms. Clearly, she had been knocked out by chemicals as Risa could still smell the faint scent of chloroform fumes lingering in the air.
 
Throwing Ai over her shoulder, Risa half dragged and half carried her off praying desperately that they would manage to escape. If there was only one captor, she might have had a chance. Unfortunately, the other men had noticed the commotion and had gotten out of the car to chase after them. Risa didn't make it further than the end of the street before she was cornered in an alley.

"Give us the girl."

"I've called the cops, they are already on their way."

Tightening her hold around Ai's waist, Risa held her near, determined to protect her friend no matter what. Staring at the group of men with utmost hatred, she hoped that her bluff wouldn’t be seen through. She hadn't had any time to call anyone. The only SOS message she had sent out was one with the license plate before she dashed across the road.

Sinister laughter resonated within the walls of the deserted lane as the men closed in, ignoring the possibility of law enforcers arriving swiftly. Backing Risa into the wall, they loomed over her, sneering at her helplessness. With frightened eyes, the twenty one year old could only watch as they snatched Ai away from her embrace and carried her into the distance.

"Don't take her, take me instead!"

At that moment, Risa detested herself for showing such cowardice, imploring scum like this. Yet she had no choice as she was indeed useless in the circumstance.

"We could take you both if you like."

The men chuckled, displaying his row of decayed teeth stained with a disgusting yellow. Taking in his gruff appearance, Risa could guess what he was planning to do and the outcome wasn't one she ever wanted to come true. In that instant, she felt something topple against her leg and somehow she knew at once what that item was. Without hesitation, she ducked lowed and scooped it up. With one smooth motion, she smashed the beer bottle over the perpetrator’s head.

His howl of pain alerted the rest as he staggered backwards, cradling his head. However, the warning came too late as Risa had caught up to the departing trio and stabbed the jagged piece of glass into one of their torsos. Ramming her shoulder into the upper stomach of the remaining vermin, the rush of adrenaline in her blood blocked out any sounds other than that of her breathing ringing in her ears.

Ai-chan, I got to get Ai-chan out of here! 

Scrambling to help the unconscious girl up, Risa begged for her to wake up. It was virtually impossible for them to escape successfully unless she regained awareness. Alas her second attempt at evading the captors proved futile when a pair of hands grabbed her by the shoulders and flung her aside. The sickening thump of her head connecting to the brick wall followed by three kicks to her abdomen was more than enough to knock the wind out of her. Finding it difficult to breath, Risa fought hard against the hood of darkness threatening to overwhelm her. Cracking open her eyes with obvious effort, she spotted Ai lying less than two feet away, still knocked out. That was the last image she remembered before everything turned black.     
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 20 + AiGaki Theme Video (100818)
Post by: alwaysYou on September 01, 2010, 12:51:56 PM
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Your diary is with me. You can pick it up from my apartment - Ai
she should just go to gakisan house straight..XD

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"Risa! You're bleeding!"
LOL.damn, i suddenly laugh at this..LOL
when i'm commenting, the previous fic still in my mind..and that awesome line appear..LOL

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she might even lose a finger or two.
if so then........ haiz..too bad le..LOL.

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The tears fell like rain
QUICK! PASS ME AN UMBRELLA!!
~hua la la la la xia yu liao, kan jian da jia dou zai pao~

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With frightened eyes, the twenty one year old could only watch as they snatched Ai away from her embrace and carried her into the distance.
"Don't take her, take me instead!"
"We could take you both if you like."
those guys seem only interested in ai..poor gakisan..LOL!..
and dumb guys too..if me, i take both..=P


yea..more sadist will be coming too huh..ham is both evil and sadist..=P..
how come a sad fic can make me comment till like this..i wonder..XD
damn, it's hard to comment actually..YOUR FAULT!!!!!

same comment!!
yes, i'm lazy..XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 21 (100901)
Post by: rndmnwierd on September 01, 2010, 01:12:07 PM
 :shocked

Danger Takagaki is in danger! First the cute oneshot, now this!

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 :wub: I wuv you Hammerstein! Your angst makes my day.

But really I hope Risa will be okay, you really do love to physically abuse her so.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 21 (100901)
Post by: Sukoshi on September 01, 2010, 02:26:01 PM
Ugh feeling so faint~  :dizzy:


...........*ahem*  let me start by copying and pasting what I said in my last few reviews...

*paste* [ *gasp* hasn't Risa suffered enough?!  What MORE did you do are you going to Gaki san +(ai chan) !!!!!?!??!  ]

and now that I sound like a broken record....let me just say....

What.....what the flaming hello kitty just happened here?!!   :mon scare:

.....*tries to calm down for a minute*

So let me get this straight....there's 3 thugs, in an upscale part of town, with chloroform?!...what kind of super evil-doers did the girls run into?!?  :mon spit:

okay....so there's only 1 of 2 scenarios I'm willing to accept as a follow up

1. The thugs do horrible thugs things and everyone goes looking for the magical-pain-ending ocean that lies below a tall cliff.

or

2. The evil-doers actually belong to the Yakuza...and the head of the Yakuza family happens to Mr. Tanaka...so naturally Reina finds out and the girls get released harm free.

*hint to Hammy san...it's not option 1*    :mon mad:

Argh~ why did I read 3285 first?! why! WHy?!  :farofflook:

Went from :on gay: to  :mon ghost:  (Talk about dragging your readers through heaven and hell XD)

I'll be going to the bush now  :mon whimper:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 21 (100901)
Post by: kuro808 on September 02, 2010, 06:07:35 AM
The end of the chapter was so sad, damn you :shakes fist:

sigh update more often :tantrum:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 21 (100901)
Post by: EriKan on September 03, 2010, 12:49:13 PM
i'm really hook in your story and love it!  :heart: :heart: :heart:
always looking forward to see an update from you..
and your one shots  :love:

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 She needed to find Risa, she wanted to tell her how she felt the same way for her and that her resolution would not be deterred. As for Eri, they could make it up to her in other ways. Let them be selfish for once, and love each other regardless of the people they might hurt in the process.

i think its ok to be selfish for once..

update soon..
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 21 (100901)
Post by: badsaints on September 05, 2010, 10:49:06 AM
@BS: Don't make me doubt myself. I'm pretty sure there is such rehab. And the funny thing was I actually saw such a banner a few days after I posted this? :lol:
Oh no no I'm just curious enough to want to check it out? :P Sounds...interesting :D


Gawd I do hope this doesn't go the way we all think it will go :shocked
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 21 (100901)
Post by: lil_hamz on September 12, 2010, 12:12:03 PM
I'm sooooooooooooo sorry for not replying to comments faster. But I've gotten a job so my online moments will be even less than before :( But I'll still write when I can so don't forget about this thread please. Onegai~~

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Merry Go Round
Chapter 22
 
The veil of blackness finally cleared as Risa slowly found herself gazing up at the ceiling of a foreign location. The fog in her mind dissipated gradually as her eyes started to focus on her surroundings. She was in a dilapidated hut that was bare except for a lone table and two folding chairs placed on either side of it. Something wasn’t right about this picture. As she thought harder to remember what had happened before she landed up here, the events of the previous night came flooding back in a rush.

Being at Ai’s house, running off before she could dress her hand injury wholly, going back to find her only to see her captured by a group of dubious men, the short fight in the alley and then…this.
 
Ai-chan! Was she alright?
 
In her haste to get up and locate her friend, Risa pushed herself up with her elbows from her lying down position on the dirt floor but instantaneously fell back when the excruciating pain from both her head and body hit her hard. Squeezing her eyes shut and biting down on her lip, Risa struggled hard to not cry out in pain.  She wasn’t certain if the men were still around and she definitely didn’t want to alert them to the fact that she had woken. Wrapping her arms around her torso to feel at her bones, she suspected that the kicks she had received had resulted in a couple of bruised ribs.
 
“Gaki-san, are you okay?”
 
A quivering voice laced with immense concern entered her ears and Risa knew at once whom it belonged to.  Reopening her eyes, her vision was met with the tear streaked and dirty face of the woman she loved.
 
“No Ai-chan, are you alright?”
 
Allowing the older to help her up, Risa grunted against her wishes when the jarring movement aggravated her wounds.
 
“I’m so sorry, this is all my fault.”
 
More tears fell from her already swollen eyes when Ai saw how much pain her sub-leader had to endure. Her short hair was matted with clots of dried blood and she grimaced with every small shift of her tiny frame.  Releasing her arms from holding her stomach, Risa motioned for Ai to come closer. When she did, the younger took her into a gentle embrace, letting the shivering form lean against her chest.
 
“Shush. None of this is your fault. And it’s true. Because I said so.”
 
“Gaki-saaaaaan!!”
 
Breaking down completely when she heard these comforting words, Ai gripped tightly onto Risa’s clothes and sobbed into the nook of her neck.
 
“I’m so scared. What will they do to us?”
 
“No matter what happens, I’ll be here with you. And I won’t let them hurt you. It’s a promise.”
 
The two spent the rest of that day drifting in and out of sleep as they rested in the uncomfortable environment. They were incredible worn out by the shortage of food and water as well as the stifling weather of midsummer.  That night, as temperatures fell and the night become slightly more bearable with the interspersed winds incoming the shack through the tiny cracks between the wooden walls, Risa became aware of movement within the shed. Afraid that the men had returned, she didn’t open her eyes and continued pretending to be asleep.
 
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[Ai's POV]
 
I hadn’t fallen asleep at throughout the night. I had faked my weariness, as I didn’t know how to face you. Seeing how badly you were beaten up for my sake, I was all the more convinced that being with me only brought you trouble.  It was the same for Eri. If it weren’t because she wanted to protect me, she wouldn’t have been hurt when the stage lights malfunctioned.  Despite her ceaseless efforts, I did nothing to return her selfless affections and instead betrayed her trust. I had fallen in love with you without even knowing it.
 
I’m a jinx who doesn’t deserve to love or be loved!
 
Chewing on my lower lip, I wept in silence, careful to not stir the resting you. So caught up in my own thoughts, I didn’t notice that you had flinched slightly when I grazed my finger against your face to tenderly wipe at the dried blood.
 
“I’m in love with you Risa-chan. Will you please love me too?”
 
Caressing your cheek with my hand, I smiled sadly at your sleeping features, oblivious that you were conscious to my actions. As I tried to retrieve my arm, my fingers were halted in mid air when you grabbed onto them. Gasping in shock, I was stunned to see your brown eyes staring back at me. In spite of the lack of illumination, I could see the sparkle in them. Pulling my hand nearer to your mouth, you placed a soft kiss on my knuckles, all the while not breaking our eye contact.
 
“I’ve been in love with you since forever. I wish I’d told you about how I felt earlier. Then maybe we wouldn’t be in this mess.
Rather than it being your fault, it’s really mine.”
 
There was never a doubt that you were good with words, but in this moment, I couldn’t believe the extent of your skills at twisting the situation in such a way that absolved me from blame. I’m really just a cry baby, because I couldn’t help the tears that rushed from my eyes, drenching my top.
 
“Why are you so good to me? I’m not worth it.”
 
Coming to sit beside me, you drew me close and snuggled me in a bear hug.
 
“You’re worth it. Because in my eyes, you’re absolutely perfect. My perfect little Ai-chan.”
 
Lifting my chin with your cut hand, you offered a small smile before placing a kiss over my mouth. In that instant, I melted. Entirely. Everything about kissing you made me feel alive. If there was a way to know whether a person was the one, this was it. My entire body tingled with the most blissful sensation I had ever felt in my twenty-four years of existence when we shared that kiss. I knew I wanted more, I wanted to give you my everything. My body, my soul, my life.
 
Making the first move to remove my tank top, I grinned at your awestruck expression, unable to believe what I was suggesting.
 
“Are you sure? Because Ai-chan, I don’t want to force you against your wishes.”
 
“I’m sure. I love you Risa-chan.”

I affirmed again, finally confidant that I was positive about who I was in love with after all this time. It was you. My loyal companion ever since I started out in this industry.

Allowing you to pull my tank top over my head, I spread my legs apart to make it easier for you to unzip my denim shorts and tug them down my legs.  The two final pieces of garments came off when you unclasped my bra and I quickly wriggled out of my panties. This was it, this was how I was going to lose my first time. Although the atmosphere was less than satisfying, it was enough for me. Because I was doing it with you.
 
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[Risa's POV]
 
Note: This part consists of some *ahem*...well...pervy moments which I don't think I can post here without getting in trouble or offending anyone. So tell me here if you wanna read it? I'll PM or something.

 
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“Eririn, will you please put on a cardigan?!”
 
With flashing eyes, the lanky lady ordered her same generation member. Going as far as to drape the knitted material over her exposed shoulders, Michishige Sayumi fumed, showing obvious displeasure at the unwanted attention her friend was receiving from the staff of the karaoke joint.
 
In the past two hours they had been there, more than half a dozen of the male workers had into dropped by their exclusive room to enquire about whether they needed more drinks or extra orders of various snacks. One was even ridiculous enough to ask if the room temperature had to be adjusted, when they already had the remote controller with them!
 
“For the last time NO! We DON’T need anything else!”
 
Shouting out in anger and exasperation, Sayumi shook her fists at the last staff worker who exited the room in a frenzy and flopped back down on her seat.
 
Those leery bastards!
 
Muttering the next statement while folding her arms over her chest, she transferred her killer stare from the room door, which had swung shut, to the other occupant in the room. Kamei Eri was still screaming into her mic, hollering at god knows what song in a bid to forget her troubles.
 
As she wasn’t a strong drinker, two to three cups of sake was enough to send her into a crazed state. Currently, she was singing in a monotonous voice while banging loudly on the tambourines provided by the establishment.
 
“God, when will this end?”
 
For the first time in her young life, Sayumi sincerely found someone other than herself to be a terrible singer. Her best friend had invited her out for some fun at the KTV place. Unfortunately, the narcissistic one had found out soon after that watching the person she was in love with drown her sorrows with alcohol and yelling herself hoarse was far from her idea of ‘fun’.
 
The continuous stream of text message alerts that kept emitting from Eri’s cell phone added on to the bunny’s irritation and she at last snapped. Rummaging through the turtle’s bag to retrieve her phone, the raven haired beauty scanned through the long list of messages.
 
“Mom…mom…sister…mom…sister…Gaki-san…”
 
“Gaki-san?”
 
Surprised that Risa would contact Eri during this awkward period where they were all going through the unpleasant stage of having feelings for the wrong people, Sayumi accessed the message.
 
PL 658 G
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: kuro808 on September 12, 2010, 12:29:46 PM
more TakaGaki drama although the addition of implied romantic scenes is cool
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: rndmnwierd on September 12, 2010, 01:22:49 PM
Do want pervyness!!!  :drool:

Poor Sayu, having to put up with a heartbroken turtle. Oh, was the text she received from Gaki the one trying to ask for help?

EDIT: I just realized it was the license plate number. Will Sayu figure out what it means? BTW, didn't Ai give her first time to Eri already? Or was it that she took Eri's and wouldn't let her return the favor?
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: Sukoshi on September 12, 2010, 02:00:53 PM
HA!  I'm not gonna be had this time!  I'm going to read MGR first! XD

Ai chan and Gaki san are untied and alone in a shack?! (with a cellphone?!)   What kind of super thugs are these?!   :sweat: Hope the stupid super thugs get lost in the forest and never come back  :ph43r:   and since the thugs have left them alone....to possibly work things out?!  I'm thinking it's closer to scenario 2  (scenario 1 is still not an option!!  :mon fire:)  Some part of me thought that Eri had something to do with this last chapter....(secret scenario 3) :mon dunno:

hmm...but maybe she still does....she might just be drinking the guilt away!!   :hehehe:

erm...back to Ai chan and Gaki....what are they doing in the shack?!  :mon scare:   That can't be good for Gaki's condition.  Ai chan's gonna end up putting Gaki in the hospital XD

and Gaki san messaged the license plate number to Eri?!  Strange choice but maybe that was the first contact name she could find on her cell XD  It would have been faster to send it to Sayu...Looks like she at least checks her phone and everyone else's too XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: kawaii beam on September 13, 2010, 01:20:05 AM
hskgc i t WHA~?! nu!!!!!! GAKI AICHAN! OMG that's like the worst place for gaki to take ur virginity! XD expecialy in a dirty place like that! D:

on the otherhand...poor eririn! D: and sayu^^; XD i'd get annoyed too XD with all of those waiters comming in and out with the worst excuses XD and i really hope that sayu understands that message! she must help save the leader and subleader! D:

kawaii wants the perv pweez~ :heart:

gj :thumbsup
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: kano-chan on September 13, 2010, 04:59:09 AM
Oh My Godd!!! What are they doing??? :shocked: They can't just do it in a place like that! :panic: What if the guys come back!?! :mon scare: Mewillkillzallofem! :angry:
Please send the pervyness right over! :welcome
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: Swtme03 on September 13, 2010, 05:06:27 AM
umm...yeah...totally want this perv part  :grin:
My mind is running circles around this whole fic   :shocked
I anticipate the next chapter so much it's almost crazy~!  :panic:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: EriKan on September 13, 2010, 11:32:24 AM
ai-chan! gaki-san! really.. in a place like that..  XD
the story is not complete without gakisan's pov..
want to read it.. onegai  :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: LovelyGaki on September 15, 2010, 10:43:26 AM
I think I'll join in the fun and request for the pervy too. :lol:
TakaGaki love :heart:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: kano-chan on September 18, 2010, 08:36:22 AM
Got the chapter~! :w00t:

**Reads** ----> :mon blood: :imdead:

The pervy wuz PERVY! XD Short, but hawt! :on bleed:

Good job! :thumbsup

Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: Swtme03 on September 18, 2010, 09:26:50 AM
^
uh...  :shocked
Ditto  :grin:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: EriKan on September 18, 2010, 09:32:04 AM
read it..

then  :mon blood:
it's short but hot..

and don't worry about your writing coz i love it  :on lol:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: rndmnwierd on September 18, 2010, 12:02:17 PM
*brings out a plate of perv cookies* I'm so proud of you Hammies, welcome to the dark side. :grin: Short, but oh so sweet and Takagaki to boot, what's not to love. It's good, I like it. I definitely felt the sentiment behind it, too. Hopefully, we could get more of this from you now. :wub:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: YumePouk on September 22, 2010, 01:09:14 AM
OMG I really can't wait to read your next chapter of Merry Go Round
Thank you for the censured part of MGR 22
it's so sweet and smexy  :bow: :bow:
that was my expressions when I read all the chapter
:ptam-shy: :ptam-wub: :badluck: :OMG: :shock:

Yeah TakaGaki are together :luvluv1: :shy1: *the perv part* :on_hot: :on roll: :imdead:

I want to know what will happen next and what will they do????!!!!!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: Sukoshi on October 07, 2010, 01:27:24 PM
Just noticed you send me some "cookies"  (sorry I didn't reply sooner....had no internet)  :kneelbow:

Ah... I actually prefer the tamer version...but I'm an odd ball like that XD  but did you know what it made me want really badly?  M O R E

M G R !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  :mon innocent: 

(lol sorry, this must be some weird MGR withdrawal part 2  :lol:)
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: mode107 on October 08, 2010, 04:32:20 PM
That karaoke scene; was it a reference to Sayu's Konusapi account of Eri's "unnecessary sexiness" due to having nothing on but a camisole (and probably panties)? XD
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: rndmnwierd on October 08, 2010, 11:18:20 PM
^What? :lol: I've really gotta start paying more attention to Sayu's radio show, she's always got something interesting to say about the others.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: mode107 on October 08, 2010, 11:23:45 PM
^ Yup! A while ago I read Erien's summary of Konusapi from 09-12-23
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Not long ago, Eri and Sayu planned to hang out together but they had a rehearsal that day. Fortunately for them, the rehearsal ended 4 hours before the scheduled time and they had a meal together before going to karaoke. They went to the karaoke not to sing, but to eat and chat. It was humid in the room after some time. Eri took off her clothes out of a sudden, leaving her camisole on. Eri looked very sexy in that and Sayu was worried that a staff might just walk into the room to check if they needed anything so she asked Eri to put on her clothes which Eri refused, reasoning that its dark and no one would be able to see. To Sayu, the darkness added unnecessary sexiness. She managed to convince Eri to put on her (Eri's) rehearsal jersey in the end.
I can totally picture this. :lol:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: kRisZ on November 26, 2010, 04:04:21 PM
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She had spent the previous night making love to her girlfriend, a young lady so wonderful and pure that nothing should ever come close. Yet when she closed her eyes, all she could see was somebody else. And when they kissed, her tongue could only taste the strawberry flavoured lip gloss of another.
A hope for TakaGaki  :w00t:

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After all, she had given Eri her word that she was the only one she loved. And that she was the person who gave her existence meaning.
One word... misery

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"I can't break my promise."
It's either break the promise and be happy or keep the promise and stay in misery. Kinda hard to decide if it was me

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Nonetheless, she couldn't she couldn't bring herself to let Ai go.
Too painful yeah? But can you afford to look at her half-whole? <-- is that a word?  :grin:

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"I'll do better. I'll work harder until you'll fall for me."
Hmmm

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As she had fallen to her knees, sobbing heartbreakingly at her fate of being kept apart from the woman she loved.

Ouches


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"Stop the car!" 




Ai saw Risa  :w00t:

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Even when our hands were linked, I couldn't feel your love for me.


Eri I love you but please let her go  :gyaaah:  lol


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"I love you Ai-chan. There's no right or wrong when it comes to love. I'll keep on giving you my all, even if you can't return any of it."


Oh please  :depressed:

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It might not be a bad thing if the chest pain, the blacking out or white spots in my vision turned out to be something serious. Maybe if I died, I wouldn't be so tortured by these feelings of anguish whenever you appeared in my thoughts. Coming to this conclusion was the reason I decided against visiting the hospital earlier.
:fainted:

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"Would you want to keep me company at a nicotine anonymous meeting?"
lol



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"That stupid girl. She was only supposed to learn Japanese and how to sing and dance. Not how to fall in love... with the wrong person."
:lol:

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Even though you are far away...

...I wish you happiness.

I bury my love, deep within my heart.

For you can never know, how I will always love you.
Oh gosh  :cry:

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“Why didn’t you tell me, Risa-chan...”
Takahashi Ai, in case you have forgotten, you are involved!



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Your diary is with me. You can pick it up from my apartment - Ai
Finally  :w00t: but wait too early to celebrate

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Infection seemed to have begun to set in and if things got worse, she might even lose a finger or two.
OMG! The writer is so cruel!  :mon freeze:

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Let them be selfish for once, and love each other regardless of the people they might hurt in the process.
:onioncheer:  :onioncheer:  :onioncheer:

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They focused their leery gazes on her taunt midriff, exposed by the winds lifting her top. As well as her tight butt and shapely legs hardly covered by her shorts. But most of all, they drooled at her gorgeous face made even more enticing under the moonlit night.
:OMG:

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Squinting from where she stood, she realized to her horror that the person they were currently loading into the vehicle was Ai!
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


OMG!!! please don't make those bastard touch them!


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Allowing you to pull my tank top over my head, I spread my legs apart to make it easier for you to unzip my denim shorts and tug them down my legs.
AiGaki, wrong place, wrong time but perfect ummm... moment?  :luvluv1:

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The two final pieces of garments came off when you unclasped my bra and I quickly wriggled out of my panties.
There's a part of it that made me  XD sorry



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“God, when will this end?”
:lol:  :lol:  :lol:






Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: Bamtai on December 05, 2010, 07:10:53 PM
Hey!
I'm a new reader and I have to say that this story is really amazing! I really like it how you made the relationships between the girls so complicated and yet so clear :twothumbs Can't wait to see how Ai-chan and Gaki will survive and what will happen to poor Eri  :cry:
Keep up with the work, you'll make me a happy person  :lol:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: dark-atrox on December 13, 2010, 06:38:07 AM
this story is full of drama  :cry: :cry: :cry:

i was thinking who will end up with who.... :? though im definitely sure with TakaGaki couple!  :nervous

how about the neko-chan then?  :(  or the jun panda?  :huhuh

oh well, i'll leave it to you, author-san!  :yep:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: ShiroiHana on December 21, 2010, 09:58:20 AM
ah, this fic is making me feel that love is equal with pain  :nervous
almost all of the character here is having a painful love life, with the exception of koha, lin, and maybe tsunku...or even the kidnapper...

i feel bad for sayu, because all that she could do is watching from a far for eri. then her line that's saying that she isnt having anyone that loves her
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Eririn will never like me. No one will ever love me.
.... :(
i feel bad for eri, because ai doesnt love her, i even doubt that ai is ever love her...she may just blurred the line between friendship and love..but, i feel like i want to shake the turtle head a little so that she could turn her head and found that a certain rabbit is continuously looking at her..
i feel bad for gaki-san because she thought that ai didnt love her even though ai means the world to her yet she cant help but to help ai..in the critical time..
i feel bad for ai because she is an idiot, she said she doesnt want to hurt eri yet she did it, she said she doesnt want to cheat yet she did it,...she is confused and i believe that she didnt mean to hurt anyone..yet no one cant be hurt if the problem has become like this...
i feel bad for reina because gaki-san only has ai in her heart. but i feel bad more because she is smoking...smoking is bad for health...>.<
i feel bad for aika because she knows reina's smoking behavior and having difficulty on thinking how to help her.
i feel bad for jun because like what sayu said, she shouldnt  fall for a wrong person
this fic isnt only a triangle love, lol..it becomes a circle with one love one yet that one person love someone else that love someone else...etc..
oh...one more thing...why are they doing that kind of thing in that sort of place? cant they...um...do it...somewhere that is more suitable and in a more comfortable situation instead...? for god sake, they are currently being kidnapped :lol: how if the kidnapper back at that place..? things will be funny if that's really happen >_<

well, for now on, i will wait on how will the story continue with huge curiosity,
ham-san ganbare~ ^o^


Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: lil_hamz on December 26, 2010, 01:48:25 PM
Thanks for reading and liking MGR everyone! I'm sorry C23 is taking so long. Things have been somewhat crazy. But I'm working on it. And if things go well, I might have a one-shot up soon.

100000000000 apologies for not replying to comments. I'll try to do it as soon as I can? Gomenasai!

Oh and if anyone has asked for the perv part of C22 and have not gotten it yet, please let me know? I might have overlooked it.

Have a good Xmas and great New Year!
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 22 (100912)
Post by: shenlog on December 26, 2010, 07:11:59 PM
The perv bit of chapter 22 was awesome  :thumbsup
thanks a lot, it was a bit like late christmas present  :twothumbs
Can't wait for chapter 23 now  :peace:
merry christmas and happy new year  :D
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: lil_hamz on June 15, 2011, 09:45:38 AM
Merry Go Round
Chapter 23
 
It wasn't certain what time it was when the men returned. Although they weren't quiet, the two girls were far too exhausted from their 'activities' to stir from the commotion caused. Grabbing a bottle of alcohol from the metal rack stacked against the wall, they started talking.
 
"I'm going first."
 
"What?! I was the one who spotted her."
 
"I'm the leader here. Shouldn't I get piority?"
 
When they finally decided on the order, they tossed their half drunk bottles to the side carelessly, breaking them into pieces of broken shards. Scanning the rusty furniture for any additional tools which might add them in their act, some torn pieces of rope were picked up along with a mental pipe.

The enormous noise emitted from the door flinging open reverberating throughout the quiet night jolted Risa awake. Still groggy from her weary frame of mind and injured state, she wasn't able to process what was going on around them until the garment covering their bodies was roughly snatched away.
 
"Look at what we have here! Seems like the lady is all ready for the taking!"
 
Loud guffaws ensured and it was only now that Risa realized how inappropriately they were dressed. Or rather, how dangerously little Ai was clad in. Her shorts were barely pulled up to her waist and they were not yet buttoned or zipped. Furthermore, she wasn't wearing anything on her upper body. Frightened for her safety, the younger scrambled to shove the visibly scared girl behind herself.

“Oh no no, young lady, you don't have to wear that back again.”

"Yeah. Saves us all some trouble."

Agreeing with his partner, the first man who spoke tore away Risa's shirt which Ai was trying to put on. Throwing it to another member of the gang, the one who caught it brought the plait pattern top up to his nose for a deep sniff.

"Ummmm you sure smell good."

Finding his actions disgusting, Risa's brows curled into a frown as she surveyed the scene before her. It was clear what was going through the minds of these sick men and she couldn't help but feel a sense of dread rise up within her.

“There there, pretty ladies shouldn't frown.”

Unable to contain her fury at knowing what would soon befall them, Risa exploded with rage.

"SHUT THE F*** UP!"

Undeterred by her shout, the tallest of the men sauntered up to where Ai cowered behind Risa and slowly ran his fingers through her hair. Shifting himself exceedingly close to Ai on purpose to stare down her bra, he hollered to the rest of his gang.

"Looks yummy!"

One of the four who had been quiet till this moment finally spoke up.

 “Then you should know what to do.”
Nodding back at him to acknowledge his instructions, he subsequently tugged Ai to her feet by pulling on her left upper arm. Seeing that he had made his move, Risa sprang up immediately with the intention to grab hold of Ai. Unfortunately, her efforts were foiled by a hard kick to her chest.
 
Although she was thrown backwards from the force of the blow, Risa didn't give up. She knew what was waiting for the love of her life if she didn't help her. Ai's captor continued to tease her by snaking an arm around her waist and leaning his face near to her lips.

"DON’T TOUCH HER!"

Struggling to push herself up, Risa lugged for the men but was thrown off with her back connecting first to the rusty metal shelf. Landing face first on the dirt ground, she groaned against her wishes when another boot connected to her torso.
 
"Gaki-san!"
 
Struggling against the leader who was now holding her, an endless stream of tears fell from Ai's already swollen eyes. Fed up of Risa interrupting his advances on such a pretty woman, the leader ordered before pulling Ai towards the door. 

"Fix her good."
A stocky built gruffly dressed brute stepped away from the rest to tower above the injured bean still lying on the ground. Raising the metal bar in his hands, he swung it down with all his strength.
 
"This is for what you did to me in the alley!"
 
It was the first time Risa experienced such intense pain. It was so excruciating that her entire mind went blank. Bringing her arms up to cradle her stomach, she could not protect her chest from the relentless blows as the stomping and kicking rained on.
"As for you..."

Using his hands to caress Ai's cheek then fondle her thigh, the leader then ran his tongue over her ears to enjoy the succulent texture of this rare beauty. However, he didn't expect her to bite him. Sinking her perfectly white teeth into the flesh on his arm, Ai tried to take the opportunity to break free.
 
Despite her valiant attempt, it proved futile when the angry man countered her defiance with a hard slap. Losing her balance and falling backwards, a tiny stream of red began to trickle from the corner of her mouth. The force from the smack made her head swim and Ai found it hard to focus. Blinking to try and gather her senses, she reached out blindly while muttering weakly.
 
"Risa-chan..."
 
It was a twist of fate that she fell near where Risa lay as it enabled her to crawl to where the younger was writhing in pain. Using one trembling hand to brush the bangs drenched with sweat away from her eyes, Ai's heart felt as if it was being wretched out of her body when she noticed how dull looking those usually beautiful honey brown eyes were.

It took tremendous effort for Risa to shift any part of her body as every inch of her torso exploded in pain with the slightest movement. Despite that, she placed a hand over Ai's which was resting on her cheek in order to comfort her. 

The touching scene did nothing to waver the evil resolute of the men as after taking their cue from the leader who was smirking to himself, they dragged Ai forcefully to the shelf and roughly tied her wrists to the metal structure. Pulling on the ripped bondage helplessly, Ai struggled to get free.

"No...."

Ignoring her desperate pleas, the head shouted out in glee.

"Who wants to tear off her panties?"

Recognizing that this was their ringleader's usual behavior whenever an innocent girl had fallen prey into their hands, they knew better than to go against him.

"You!"

Pulling at her restraints frantically resulted in the rope cutting through the flesh of her wrists and crimson red blood started to drip from the lesions.

"No...please..."

"You are undoubtedly the best I've ever tasted."

Lowering his head to hover above Ai's exposed stomach, he took a small part of her skin between his teeth and bit down. Deriving extreme pleasure from seeing Ai squirm beneath his gaze, he stuck his fingers through the leg of her shorts.

"YOU BASTARD!"

In a burst energy, Risa rolled over to her front and pushed herself up. Dashing over to where Ai was, she aimed for the scoundrel’s head. Alas her strike was easily avoided by the agile man and his followers managed to restrain her once more. This time they decided to stop her from wrecking their plans for good. 
 
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The journey in the taxi was unusually quiet as none of it’s occupants were speaking. Sandwiched in the middle between Reina who was staring out the window and Eri who was fidgeting with her hands, Sayumi signed softly. She wondered if she was right to inform Reina about the mysterious text message that Risa had sent.
Instead of leaving the task of finding the missing Gokkie pair up to their company staff, the trio had pleaded to be allowed to tag along when there was news about locating the car in question.

“I don’t know why you three insist on coming. We don’t know what we might find.”

Somehow the manager’s words sent a chill down Sayumi’s spine. Not sure what they might find…as long as it’s not the cold and stiff bodies of their band mates, then everything would be fine…right?

Casting a sideways glance at her best friend, the bunny noticed that Eri had stiffened in her seat. After knowing each other for so many years, the middle Rokkie was convinced that her friend was thinking of the same issue.

Frankly, it was crazy for them to suspect that their leader and sub-leader were kidnapped considering they weren’t from prestigious backgrounds or anywhere near the top idol status that some other girl groups were enjoying now.

Yet if they weren’t forcefully taken away, why couldn’t they be contacted? And going by the information that one of the staff had received from a ‘friend,’ that license plate belonged to a car which was recently stolen.

“Please let them be safe. Gaki-san, please be okay…”

Reina’s repeated mutterings in a low voice weren’t lost on Sayumi and as she twisted slightly to study the kitten’s reflection in the car window, for the first time after realizing the complicated relationship affairs within their group, Sayumi felt that Reina was just as pitiful as the rest of them.   

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“Please stop hurting her. I’ll do anything you say!”
 
The beatings being inflicted on Risa were so brutal that Ai couldn’t bear to watch a second longer. Blood had splattered across the floor and ran down the weapons that the men were gripping in their hands. Left sprawled on her back in an awkward position, Risa didn’t even have the strength to whimper with each blow that was thrusted upon her battered body.
 
Satisfied that he had gotten the reply he wanted, the chief motioned for them to stop.
 
“Anything? You’ll do anything I say?”
 
“Y…y..es…”
 
As he approached her with an evil and victorious smirk, Ai let her shoulders fall limp, in turn ending her struggles. It was useless to resist. Not when they were in such perilous circumstances. Squeezing her eyes shut and willing herself to not think of her impending fate, Ai cried. It was a heart wrenching sight and any normal person would have felt sorry for her. Nevertheless, the chief empathetic side wasn’t stirred.     
 
-----
 
The dark and heavy cloud slowly lifted itself from around her and gradually, the image of the shed they were imprisoned in reappeared. The first sounds that entered her ears were the tormented sobs of Ai. Turning towards where the cries originated, Risa’s eyes widened when she realized what was happening in the scene before her. 
 
“NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!”
 
The scum had just finished violating Ai. He had marred the perfect and innocent Ai.
 
“I see you are awake.”
 
Buttoning his shirt and pulling up his pants, he stepped aside on purpose so that Risa could take in the full view of how Ai looked in that moment.
 
Her eyes were puffy and bloodshot, her shorts were ripped open and dangled from around her ankles. Naked with cuts and bruises covering her body, she tried to cover as much as herself as she could with her limps.

The bastard couldn’t even cover her up after he was done!

Risa thought through gritted teeth, as she imagined herself tearing the fiend to pieces.

In that moment, Risa wished upon every fiber in her body that she could somehow get to Ai and hole her in her arms. That she could remove her from this vile place and bring her back to the safe and secure home that she knew.

I brought this upon you Ai-chan. Oh god, please let me be the one tortured instead. Just not Ai. Just not her.

She couldn’t stop the tears that fell from her eyes even when the saltiness in them stung the wounds on her lips and face. Her heart ached for Ai. Her entire being burned from seeing how Ai was being treated.

“Ai-chan…Ai-chan…”

With every time that Risa uttered her name, Ai felt as if she would die. She didn’t want Risa to see her like this, to see the torture she had to endure and how broken she had become. The glimmer of hope that the worst was over and that the men would finally leave them alone was shattered when the chief announced to his followers.
 
“Don’t say I’m not good to you guys. It’s your turn to enjoy.”
 
Hoots of cheers and laughter resonated throughout the small shack as all of them began to remove their clothing.
 
She was stunned, she was shocked. But she was also too tired to defy them. Having lost count of how many times they had forced themselves on her or which of the men have had their turn, she could only lie motionless on the ground as the beasts had their way with her. Even when they used small knives to slice across her skin and licked at the blood which seeped through, Ai barely flinched. She could no longer fight them. Neither the slaps that they meted out on her for fun nor the rough hands which forced her to kiss them back.

Every now and then, they would pause for a moment to say. “This is revenge for calling me a bastard and hitting my head just now.” Or “no wonder you f***ed her earlier. She is truly delicious!”
 
Risa felt sick. She wanted to vomit and the pain from before came flooding back as soon as she looked away from Ai. This was too much. Both physically and emotionally. If there was ever a time she wished for someone to search for them, this was it. Where were their family? Where were the people who loved them? Where was Eri? If she was here, Risa was sure she would do all she can to protect Ai.

I’m sorry Ai-chan. I couldn’t protect you.    
 
 The stifled and pitiful moan which escaped Ai’s lips brought a sudden and renewed vigor into her weak body. And once again, Risa found the strength to stop their perverted actions. They were hurting her Ai, causing her pain and suffering.

“Stop this. Stop what you’re doing to Ai!”

The grimace on her face and how hard she bit on her split lips told Risa that Ai was hurting. She was so in pain that she would probably collapse any second. And before she did, Risa swore to get to her first.

Not caring that the rope the men wound around her wrists was cutting into her flesh or that the pain from her various injuries were warning her brain that she would not be able to take anymore physical abuse, Risa pulled on the bindings restrains with all her strength until the cord miraculously snapped. She could feel the warm and sticky substance trickle down her forearm and staining her sullied clothes. But more than that, she could sense that Ai was hurt, afraid, and shivering. 

-----

“That’s the car isn’t it?!”

Reina’s astute eyesight glimpsed the image of the stolen automobile as soon as the car they were in neared the deserted spot hidden at the fringe of the woods.

“PL658G. That’s it!”

Sayumi replied in an agitated manner while reading off the screen of her cellphone.

“Alright, you girls stay here while I call the police.”

Opening the car door and getting out of the car where the reception was stronger, their manager didn’t notice that Reina had stealthily exited the vehicle as well. Once outside, she made a run towards the hut which was located further down the dirt path. Seeing her actions, Eri followed suit and ended up overtaking her fellow generation member as she sprinted on ahead.

Against her better judgment, Sayumi cried out Eri’s name when she realized the danger that the turtle was putting all of them in. Her shout alerted their manager who had just ended the call to the police. Ordering Sayumi to return to the car, he immediately chased after the runaway pair. However, she couldn’t bring herself to stay behind alone especially when the lives of her friends were at stake. Ignoring the elder man’s caution, the bunny too followed the rest and made her way to the shack.
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: kuro808 on June 15, 2011, 10:09:43 AM
welcome back

that was such an intense chapter, good job
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: kano-chan on June 15, 2011, 12:38:02 PM
Oh my god! Even though this is just a fic, but how painful to read! :OMG: :pleeease: I swear I'm so angry right now that I would put all of those bastards in a cell and torture them every single day until they die! :temper: :mon mad: :mon fierce: :on voodoo: :mon zoom: :mon fire:

Not my innocent Ai-chan!!! :mon ref:

And I don't want the girls to find Ai-chan and Risa in that state.. :badluck: Ai-chan mostly. :fainted:

Oh mah GAWD! :imdead:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: oddball on June 15, 2011, 01:13:34 PM
Oh my god! What a dramatic chapter to come back with, I was so sure too that Ai and Gaki would be saved but insted Gaki got beaten to a pulp and Ai, poor Ai was, abused, infront of the girl she loved, destroyed both pysically and mentally, how will she ever get back from this, how will either of them recover from this

seems as though the girls and the police are on thier way but how will they react, after seeing Ai (and perhaps Gaki?) in the state she is in?.....
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: Sukoshi on June 15, 2011, 02:09:18 PM
AHhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!  :on blackhole:

NOOOOOOooooooooooooOOoooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!   :frustrated:

*Sukoshi pulls a Reina and starts muttering*

I did not read this....I did not read this....I did not read this.....  :mon ko:

I thought they were gonna be saved for sure!   :gyaaah:  and now they are all doomed...even their old man manager!!  :stoned:

*goes back to muttering*

maybe it's just a dream...maybe it's just a dream!!

Risa could have blacked out and be having this horrible nightmare....yeah...that's it....  :fainted:

ugh...so light headed.....*faints in the corner*   :imdead:


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Random post note: Kano-chan and Sukoshi have both been killed in action...killed by words :imdead: (noticed we ended our posts with the same icon) :sweat:
+adds aya-chii to the list

Hammy-san~ you better start brewing some revive potions!
  :ph43r:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: kawaii beam on June 15, 2011, 05:10:50 PM
WHAT THE HECK DID I JUST READ?! hammi~~~~~~~~~~~~~` why~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~? they were suposeted to get saved first~~~~~~~~!!!!!! my poor takagaki D: *goes in a corner and crys* i hope they get saved in the next chapter eventhough everyone's gonna seriously be truramatized by the end of this D: i cant wait for the next one*huggles*
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: shenlog on June 15, 2011, 08:40:12 PM
They were meant to be saved  :angry1: this chapter was... well... i don't even know what to say now  :fainted:
i hope they'll get saved  :cry:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: mmsuki on June 16, 2011, 06:28:23 AM
i'm gonna post here too.. because well, posting once is not enough to relieve the anger(?) and shock i went through reading this..  XD  :on cloudeye:
the beating.... it was inevitable..  :badluck:  at this point it was already kinda hard for me to continue reading..  XD but i continued it, thinking that that would be the worse case scenario..

then Ai-chan got raped by the leader..  :stoned:  :on voodoo: :on redcard:  i seriously didn't want to read on..  :banghead: but seeing (reading) a glint of hope that they are going to be saved, i read on..  and besides the worse is over right(?).... WRONG!!!
Ai-chan gets gang raped!! :on blackhole: :on polter: and in front of Risa?!!    :frustrated: :pleeease: 

*rocks myself back and forth.."its not real.. its not real.. its not real"* :on freeze: :on freeze:

i'm gonna look for my happy place now..  :mon look:


Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: aya-chii on June 17, 2011, 11:03:24 AM
 :shocked

DAMN YOU. YOU'RE FUCKING CRUEL
how could you have ai-chan raped... again and again... in front of risa
i'm glad that you suddenly updated... but you did show-up with a better way of killing me

i hate you

i do understand you're a writer who would want to stir readers' emotions
but i-- ...
i just can't really help it...
i do have a very vivid and detailed imagination,
and reading this chapter...
is really sickening and zfjsdssajakaw;[dxzmclkbarf.. i can understand how risa feels.
Today is really a great day, having a break from tiring university...

I'm really sorry lil_hamz
i can't stop myself feeling upset..
but this doesn't mean I do really hate you fro eternity or what..
this is just a.. fiction, anyways :) i'll still read, dont worry XD


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Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: CHLoe_Li on April 13, 2012, 01:44:10 PM
Lil_hamz

Pls continue the chapter 24, you just make me crazy because of the unfinished story  :cry:  :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic:
Title: Re: Merry Go Round - Chapter 23 (110615)
Post by: kRisZ on May 01, 2012, 12:38:47 PM
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"I'm going first."

"What?! I was the one who spotted her."
 
"I'm the leader here. Shouldn't I get piority?"
OMG!!!!!!!!! I think I'm ready to become a murderer for AiGaki  :pig madder: lol

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Frightened for her safety, the younger scrambled to shove the visibly scared girl behind herself.
DAMN!!!!!

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the one who caught it brought the plait pattern top up to his nose for a deep sniff
Sicko!!!

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the tallest of the men sauntered up to where Ai cowered behind Risa and slowly ran his fingers through her hair
That Bastard!!!

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her efforts were foiled by a hard kick to her chest.
:angry1:

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Struggling to push herself up, Risa lugged for the men but was thrown off with her back connecting first to the rusty metal shelf. Landing face first on the dirt ground, she groaned against her wishes when another boot connected to her torso.
Author-san, why so cruel?  :gyaaah: It's really affecting me  :gyaaah:

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It was the first time Risa experienced such intense pain. It was so excruciating that her entire mind went blank. Bringing her arms up to cradle her stomach, she could not protect her chest from the relentless blows as the stomping and kicking rained on.
Jeezzz

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they dragged Ai forcefully to the shelf and roughly tied her wrists to the metal structure. Pulling on the ripped bondage helplessly, Ai struggled to get free.
:depressed:

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"Who wants to tear off her panties?"
OMG!  :fainted:

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Lowering his head to hover above Ai's exposed stomach, he took a small part of her skin between his teeth and bit down. Deriving extreme pleasure from seeing Ai squirm beneath his gaze
:on cloudeye:

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“Anything? You’ll do anything I say?”
 
“Y…y..es…”
:depressed:

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he dark and heavy cloud slowly lifted itself from around her and gradually, the image of the shed they were imprisoned in reappeared. The first sounds that entered her ears were the tormented sobs of Ai.
Jeez! It really did happen  :fainted: :fainted: :fainted:   AICHAN!!!  :gyaaah:

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“Don’t say I’m not good to you guys. It’s your turn to enjoy.”
:angry1:  :on voodoo:  :temper:

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Goddess of Goddesses, what did I read  :cry:

The writer is damn good, I wanna add  . :twothumbs . but girl that's kinda inappropriate for this one. Very convincing! I was cursing from start to end!

I think I'm gonna go take a walk  :(