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Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread
« on: November 28, 2006, 10:52:50 PM »
Read a good fic lately? Post your review here and reccomend it to others!
 
Posts should elaborate on:

-Storyline (How exciting was the story?)
-Authenticity (Do the characters act like their real-life counter parts?)
 
Ratings should be from 1-5 stars :pimp:

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And you can DISCUSS/emote random comments too!! Get involved, and don't forget to drop by HiP Joint fand meet all your other friendly neighborhood HiPstaz  :pimp:
« Last Edit: April 03, 2009, 06:26:19 AM by Masa »

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Lovex2 Review
« Reply #1 on: November 29, 2006, 05:57:14 AM »
Lovex2
By OTN1


Posted in the Perv fan fiction section yet not quite deserving it, this story is definately something worth an award in the real authoring world. With a style that is smooth and realistic it is easy to loose yourself in the mind of Aya and her dilemmas.

After celebrating her birthday in Kobe with best friend Miki fireworks go off as both admit their true feelings to each other. This only lasts for a brief time before Aya is thrown out of her comfort zone and into a whirl pool of worry as the idea of leaving H!P to join another company is put into her head by none other than dance partner, Ayumi Shibata.

The angst and fluff runs madly through this tale and is sure to pull a few heart strings. If that's not for you then the teasingly hot scenes that litter the story will definately have you waving your fan flag.

In regards to the reality of the characters and settings, Lovex2 will have you believing that this is all real and that OTN1 is really a Hello!Project member with too much time on her hands.

Lovex2 is separated into 3 parts so you are guarenteed a long satisfying read. As if that isnt enough, OTN1 (after much bagering from fans) released Lovex2-1. A sequeal completly from Miki's point of view containing some chapters of Lovex2 so we finally get to see what was going through her head. Most sequeals are a disapointment but I can assure you that this is a must read. I found myself crying all way through.

Mikan says: READ IT, BASTARDS!
I give it 5/5 hearts
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Fanfics Review Thread
« Reply #2 on: December 02, 2006, 11:36:04 PM »
Too Young
By : Wordsworth

Posted here in the piehole's fanfic section.
It is an amazingly good story..
And yes, it's a Berryz Story, don't like it? well poo on you! >=P
To me it's like watching a movie because the way it's written is like how a movie is written, a bit hard to explain! haha..

It's really well developed with lots of cute humor, and cute drama only pre-teens would have XDXDXD
Either way, I'd say this story is what inspired me to take up writing again it's just that good!

The story starts off with like a journal entry.
and it was a very interesting read like reading from different POV
And the story develops into a sweet love between Risako and a boy whose name is never given (reminds me of My Sassy Girl) but was given the nickname "Pretty Boy"
Their affection for eachother is slightly slow and it develops into something and that's what I like about it!
What's better is what they have to go through to stay together.
The story is true in a way that he writes in the events that actually has happened to them, ex: Megumi Murakami leaving H!P and C-ute
And not only do you get to read Risako's and Pretty Boy's POV, Wordsworth writes in the other Berryz POV as well!
And reading the other Berryz's members POV is just as fun!

an amazing story and my review doesn't give enough justice for it!
I say go read his story Too Young or I'll get my house to fall on you!
my rating is 5/5
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Pimping Gorgeous Doll
« Reply #3 on: December 12, 2006, 01:04:05 PM »
Pimping Gorgeous Doll
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A story by Raspberrygashes

With no parents to look out for her and little money in her pocket, adolecent Tanaka Reina meets the purple suited pimp Yoshizawa Hitomi for a job. Hitomi accepts the young girl and invites her to live in the house along with all the other prostitutes. Reina accepts and enters a world she has never seen before where the saying 'pressures of work' has a totally new meaning.

When you mix a house full of gorgeous working girls you are sure to get your fair share of cat fights, comedy and maybe even a little bit of love.

The characters are not drastically changed from their origanal selves but there has been a bit of exaggeration for entertainments sake.

This origanal story has only just begun. So take this story as your godsend to jump on the wagon and sign up onto the forum and tell us what you think of Pimping Gorgeous Dolls!!

Mikan says: Check it out, YOU BASTARDS!
I give it 4 hearts
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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #4 on: June 15, 2008, 10:59:03 AM »
Yay Yay... new discussion area for us fanfic-ers... Now we can stop the chit chat in the comments of the fics and bring it here :D

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #5 on: June 16, 2008, 02:09:31 AM »
A discussion thread. That's cool. But, don't you think it would be confusing if people start talking different fic all at once on the same thread??  :? :?

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #6 on: June 16, 2008, 03:28:07 AM »
I'm not sure its specifically meant for just fanfic discussion.
daigong did say "DISCUSS/emote random comments too"

I think it a lot of people on the fanfiction part of the site, don't venture too much to the other sections, so its kinda a place for them to get to each other as well... Maybe :P
I could be completely wrong, which is most likely :lol:

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #7 on: June 16, 2008, 04:56:33 AM »
^
You got it partially right, lollipopgirl! I probably spend most of my time in the fanfic area. Not only because I write but because I love reading them! Ppl have such great ieads and writing styles! But I do venture around too.

I think I may spend a lot of time here!

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #8 on: June 16, 2008, 05:01:14 AM »
^ you don't count... you post everywhere, i stalk you :wub:
well not really but i have noticed :lol:

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #9 on: June 16, 2008, 05:39:31 AM »
I think I'm one of those people..haven't been posting much around other than here *check stats* yeah....hmm, oh well, I guess I know who the regulars in this section are and I know some of you out there  :D XD

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #10 on: June 16, 2008, 06:04:16 AM »
i only hang out here and in the R.I.V.E ... and the Perv but i don't post there...

Kinda easy to understand, right?  :otomerika: touch my heart, rika...

oh... hi tito, lollipopgirl, strawb3rrykream... you here too? *surprise!* ... or not...  :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #11 on: June 16, 2008, 06:53:16 AM »
^ you don't count... you post everywhere, i stalk you :wub:
well not really but i have noticed :lol:

So should I be worried? :lol:
Just kidding, it's cool.
Oh, and hi to everyone! I think I know most of you... :D

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #12 on: June 16, 2008, 12:53:54 PM »
Yeah, we're all pretty much in a world of our own, huh? xD

I frequent the girls' sections too, but I don't comment much unless there's a bit of femmeslash about xD

Roffle, checking my own stats but it seems that 790 of my posts went here, roffle xD

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #13 on: June 16, 2008, 01:33:51 PM »
"Helooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo"

Says what might be the only writer to ever post in the sports thread....I get around a lil. I don't post much anywhere but hear, and I think most of my posts are updates or stories and have something to do with my stories so I guess that means I'm a bad person.... Or that lolipopgirl loves me extramuch! I usually write in the fanfic section..........of the perv section XD

 I think my average is still prety high. I wanted it to be an average of five posts per day. I dunno if I achieved that... I don't think I did.....

 also a sort of review.

 I also give lovex2 5/5 stars. But I also give them to Love x 2 the sequel and the one that came after that and the one that came after that and the one that came after that. After losing my sanity in a cave, doing nothing but reading Love x too many I found the light in the end of the tunnel in the form of my big red X in the upper right corner.

 You see I really liked the story. It made me feel incredible and diferent feelings. But the problem is, there are too many chapters, too many sidestories if that is what they are, too much confusion, too many alternate endings and did I mention too much confusion amidst all the heartache? I just hated not knowing what the hell is reall anymore and we all know that the human brain can't separate fact from reality so I gave up after the first two sequels or something.

 Amidst all that, it is also a very timeconsuming fic, especially for those with slow computers. So although I have to downgrade it to four stars, I have to recomend, that you please don't try reading it all in one night, if you value your sanity and take many breaks. Also don't let your evil older sister "Take a bite" out of your sandwitch... *vein pops*

 ok, I think I might do weekly reviews here. This was kinda fun adn I get to bitch about fics.

 But don't be discouraged young authors. Your stories are great. Like for example LOVE X 2 is really really good. One of the problems though was finding where I ended the night before. This guy should just make it into a freakin book and sell it! That way we can bookmark it!

 Anyway, great story, but it was Love x 2 long.And on top of all that, there are alll these threads with this story and only one has past the second story, so to make things even more confusing, you also have to sift through a couple of threads as well when looking for your stop..... I say, it's not worth losing your mind over. So IF you are brave enough to take on the challenge of reading this story and IF you actually manage to read it. Then bravo, you will be rewarded with a lot of great moments and such because it truly is a good fic.

 Final rating, 4/5 (Sorry!)

 Also, never posting here again. I want to stay at this number forever!~!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 I'll just edit this post again with reviews whenever I feel like it. Currently rereading "When love hurts, but even though I left my PC on for how long so I don't have to sift through the history, it shut down eventually (or rather, froze) so my review might come reeeeaally late. Also cause I have a loooot of HW and like three assignments. Or two? I can't remember. Honestly think I have three, but i can only remember the two, photography *shver* and History. I think there's a Bio one too, which I think was easy but I honestly do not remember anything about that..... Anyway, back to sleep, I haven't stopped sleeping like at all today. My fun crazy teacher thought it would be fun to make the fat goalkeeper a Striker for a day so I am officially dead. Seriously it hurts everywhereeeeeeeee~! :'( I Wanna die~!
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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #14 on: June 16, 2008, 02:17:59 PM »
:o Sweeety, don't ever post again... you're on the devil's number :w00t:
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Your average isn't quite 5 yet... good luck getting that when you can't post :P
I do venture out of here a lot more recently seeing its exam period and I'm procrastinating a lot, but the fanfic section is my main destination :heart:

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #15 on: June 17, 2008, 09:38:37 AM »
Yaw that's right, a place where y'all can just kick back and relax, comment "Hey,  some crazy thing happened to me this morning .... I think I'll write a fanfic!"
* daigong puts the uncofuzzled hat back on Sancho

We proud of ya!! Cuz me and Masa was up in the JPH!P Library going "DAMN! How'd this section get so popular? Here we are building mountains of porn and the fanfics are blowing up nonstop. And we ain't got to know any of y'all." so bam, Masa suggested a postwhoring thread --- of course, we encourage y'all to get involved all over the community. So here's also a place where we can shake our butts at ya. :shakeit:


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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #16 on: June 17, 2008, 11:57:12 AM »
Aha, so that's what this thread is for. Haha.

Nice to see all the new people posting new fics, although I can't say I've caught up on every single story. Actually, to be honest, I haven't bothered to be active I guess. Lol. Only keeping an eye on a couple of stories here and there (like rokun, whenever he updates, ha).

Well, I hardly venture out of the fanfic section, although, like Yuuyami, I lurk in the girls' sections. Haha. I usually don't post unless I have something to say. I feel too jaded to be spamming my post count now. Lol.

Would like to get to know the newbs to this section a little more though. I know the earlier generations (like Yuuyami, rokun, Loser etc) a little better since I talk to them on AIM from time to time. And lol yes, I heard that Yuuyami and rokun (sorry for ratting guys XD) randomly divided up each new wave of fanfic writers into "generations". Hey, it's H!P, can you blame us for thinking like that? XDDD

...I think we're up to 7th gen now. :P

Still, fresh blood is welcome, everyone improves with time and effort. ;) My first full length story was raw around the edges, and I like to think I've gotten better. Will be glad to discuss anything with anyone, especially about writing. Warning though, I'm a writing nazi (as Yuuyami can testify to, I bet XD), so I can get very picky with details. :P

Now, to figure out what to write next. I've been editing my best friend's fanfic for her (for another fandom lol) so I haven't had much thinking time.

So, I guess that's all for now. ^_^

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #17 on: June 17, 2008, 04:44:52 PM »
Whoa, I didn't know ppl divided us writers up. What gen am I? :lol:

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #18 on: June 17, 2008, 04:50:48 PM »
Man, seeing all the new fics up I feel bad for delaying mine. And I don't even read fics anymore... much   :banghead:

Like some, I don't leave the fanfic area either. :o

It surprised me to see this thread suddenly active o.o

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Re: Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread ("NEW!")
« Reply #19 on: June 17, 2008, 06:13:25 PM »
I heard that Yuuyami and rokun (sorry for ratting guys XD) randomly divided up each new wave of fanfic writers into "generations". Hey, it's H!P, can you blame us for thinking like that? XDDD

...I think we're up to 7th gen now. :P

 :shock: USO!!!! </gaki-reaction>  I demand details on these "generations"

PlzKthx?  :mon cute:


Man, seeing all the new fics up I feel bad for delaying mine. And I don't even read fics anymore... much   :banghead:

Like some, I don't leave the fanfic area either. :o

It surprised me to see this thread suddenly active o.o


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