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A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court: Chapter 3 on 12/8 (omatase!)
« on: September 03, 2010, 07:01:02 AM »
Okay, first, yes I am crazy :lol: Second, I'm not sure exactly how this is going to go, but I have pretty set plans for the storyline of this fic... I guess I had to write another epic... :ph43r: Enjoy. XD


A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara’s Court



Prologue

“I’m gonna kick your ass for that, Yoshi,” Reina told the boy across from her in a harsh voice as she balled up her hand in a fist at her chest.

“Hey, I’m just sayin’ it how it is, yo,” the boy called Yoshi replied, trying to look unconcerned but watching the small girl’s fist carefully. “Haru saw you two at the corner crepe shop. He said he bought you a crepe, and you kept looking at each other as you ate it.”

“Of course we looked at each other!” Reina fired back. “What else do people do when they eat together?”

Yoshi chuckled a little along with his friends before settling his eyes on his girlfriend Yukiko, and pulled her close to his side before grinning back at Reina. “That’s just what we’re tryin’ to say, yo,” he said in his slightly slurred voice addled by the weed they’d been smoking not long ago. “You two were out together. Don’t tell me there isn’t something going on. Our little Reina is growing up so quickly. I wonder if you still got what it takes to be tough enough to be a head of the gang. I always knew one of these days you’d turn into just another girl like Yukiko here.”

“Hey…!” Yukiko protested after a moment. She surely didn’t appear like a helpless girl with her long character-printed gang jacket and dark eye-liner, which only accentuated her bleached-blonde gyaru-style hair. However, Reina knew better. She shared her glare of disdain with the girl now, comfortable in her shorter and less gaudy black leather jacket, though it still did feature a modest amount of gang characters.

“You’re askin’ for it, Yoshi,” she replied, knowing her position was weak against her united opposition. She was as feisty a fighter as any of them, having even had independent martial arts training, but her small form could still be overwhelmed by numbers. And she knew just what was going on here. It was a beat down.

“Hey,” Yoshi spat, looking back at one of his companions. “Our leaders have to stay independent, don’t they?” It wasn’t a question; he knew the answer perfectly well, but it was a test of one of the newer recruits as well as a display to further intimidate Reina.

The other boy nodded. “Ain’t right to get involved with each other,” he said, his eyes focused on Reina the whole time as he flexed his knuckles along with the others. “We need the diff’rence of opinion in order to have the most objective direction for the org’nization. If people fraternize they begin to think too similar, and we have a problem at the top.” He grinned, but Yoshi took up the rest from him.

“And in that case, it’s the girl that gets demoted.” Yoshi’s smile widened, showing missing teeth.

“I tell ya, I’m not fraternizing!” Reina yelled at them, but adopted a more defensive stance since she knew that there was no hope now. They’d believe what they wanted to believe, and looked for any excuse for a beat down in any case. Reina had done the same herself many times. It had just been a long time since she was on the receiving end.

“Re~ina and Ta~rou, sittin’ in a tree ♪,” Yukiko began to chime. “K – I – S – S – I…” She didn’t get to finish though, as Reina raced toward her like a flash and broke her knuckles on the girl’s jaw.

“Hey, that’s my girl!!!” Yoshi yelled, and the brawl quickly became all-out.



Reina moaned again into the cushion on her couch. Most of her body felt on fire, but she normally wouldn’t have showed such weakness if she wasn’t safe and sound in her own house.

“You really should be more careful,” a motherly voice sounded soothingly from behind her, and she felt someone raise her shirt to lay a warm moist towel on her bruised lower back. “I don’t know why you care so much about that gang anyway.”

“Mmmph…” Reina replied in half-groan and half-grunt, neither in a particularly girly fashion.

She heard a sigh, and felt the couch give as someone sat by her feet. “I’m not going to be here to take care of you all the time, you know.”

Finally Reina made herself sit up, pulling the towel from her back to lay against her forehead. She glanced at the girl peering calmly as she sat beside her. “I’m glad you’re my private best friend, Eririn,” she murmured to the girl. “I’d never be able to live down the shame of you to the rest of them.”

Eri smiled and looked away, patting Reina’s leg. “I’m just telling you, one of these times you’re gonna wake up and I won’t be around to take care of you. You need someone to take care of all those bruises and cuts you earn yourself. By the way, what was it this time? It seemed a bit worse than usual. You stumble drunk into the headquarters of the Tamagochi-gumi or something?”

Reina slapped lightly at the girl’s arm. “You know I don’t get drunk,” she said. “And no. It wasn’t that.” Seeing Eri still staring curiously at her, she sighed and continued, “It was just that dick Yoshi, thinks he can knock me out of my place if he makes me look bad.”

Eri gasped. “Your own gang!? But it’s been… years since…” She peered closer at Reina. “Actually, you haven’t had to take punishment since you officially joined Fujimoto-gumi years ago, have you? Since before Miki-chan retired…”

Reina grunted again.

“…So what happened?”

“…”

“I’m not going anywhere, you know.”

Reina mumbled something inaudible.

“What was that?”

“Someone saw me with Tarou,” she said loud enough to hear this time.

Realization dawned on Eri’s face. “Ah, I see…” Then she stood up. Turning to Reina to give her one of her crooked smiles, she said once more, “I really think you should take this chance to rid yourself of some of that responsibility. In this instance you wouldn’t even lose face.” She turned away again and took a step before concluding quietly over her shoulder, “And Tarou is a very nice boy.”

Then she left the room.

Grumbling, Reina laid back down on the couch, this time facing up so she could keep the towel at her forehead. “Tarou is a very nice boy~ ♪” she mocked. “He’s gonna get an earful the next time I get my hands on him…” Then she blushed. She really didn’t like him. Boys would only hold her back now, and she wanted to keep the control of the gang she’d spent so long attaining. She wanted the responsibility.

“Boys…” Reina mumbled as the precursors of dreams began drawing themselves on the canvas of her closed eyelids. “Girls are really the best…”

And she fell soundly asleep.



She must have been awoken by rolling over, and as her consciousness began igniting her senses, she gave a long yawn as she stretched out fully. The air tasted extraordinarily fresh, and she smiled. Eri must have sprayed some sanitizer around the room.

As her mind began working faster though, she felt that something seemed out of place. She’d just rolled over, and fully stretched. The couch wasn’t big enough for that… Shrugging it off as that she must have fallen to the floor without realizing it, she grabbed at some of the grass around her and as she was just about to open her eyes…

…Grass?

Sitting up, she rubbed her eyes since they must have been deceiving her. Maybe her right eye still wasn’t fully healed from whatever was hurting it the other day. She blinked, then looked around again.

She sat in grass that swayed in the breeze blowing up and over the side of the hill whose peak was just off to her right. In fact, the sound of the wind and breeze was about all she could hear along with the quiet activity of the untamed nature surrounding her.

“Um…” Reina said, blinking as she tried to take in all of her surroundings.

She got up, feeling a little woozy. Her bruises were still there, but they felt much better than before she had fallen asleep. Maybe she was still asleep?

“I must be dreaming…” she mumbled, and pinched herself as she began walking in her t-shirt and jeans unsteadily to the top of the hill. Feeling a chill in the air, she wished for her jacket. She didn’t even feel complete without it on. However, if this was a dream she could control, it didn’t magically appear.

“Damn Yoshi…” she complained. “Somehow this is all his fault. I know it is. Eri!” she yelled to each side of the hill, but her voice was carried away in the wind. “Eri this isn’t funny! Where the hell are you!?” Then she reached the top of the hill and stumbled to a halt, staring.

A dirt path crossed the bottom of the other side of the hill, with another, wider… road…? branching out from it straight away from her. Far down it she could see activity as if some people were walking along it, and what appeared to be a village of small old-style buildings before… She rubbed her eyes again. Beyond was a large castle, flags she couldn’t make out waving from the towers framing the gate.

“This is sure a hell of a dream…” she said, staring, and pinched her arm again.

Suddenly though she heard shouts from down and off to her right, and activity, and she froze as the air rippled beside her ear as if something had whizzed just past it.

“Stop!” came a louder, and very angry-sounding shout. Wondering if her heart was going to beat again, she drew her eyes slowly toward the activity to see a bunch of people in armor hurrying off their horses and bowing to one who had fancier armor than the rest as well as a horned helmet, and who was also striding purposefully and with great authority directly toward her. Two others flanked her, in better looking armor than the ones that stayed behind, but still without helmets. She noticed a few of the ones who stayed behind carried bows, and gulped while trying not to think of what had just flown by her ear.

“You must not do this!” she heard the shorter one urge the leader as they came within hearing range. “Let me identify the stranger!”

“It appears to be a girl,” the other one trailing added. As they closed in, Reina realized that two of them looked like very short men, with the other perhaps of average size. When she could recognize facial features, Reina’s breath caught. The leader had to be perhaps the handsomest man Reina had ever seen.

Finally, still several paces away, the leader and apparently eldest came to a stop. The other two fell in behind her as if they were used to this type of stop and go. Reina eyed the swords she now saw they carried at their sides and on their backs. Knowing a bit of martial arts herself, she thought they looked like they could use them. And very well.

“Er… hello?” she greeted, donning what she hoped wasn’t too crooked a smile.

She almost cried out when the point of a sword was suddenly at her throat, somehow drawn by the beautiful, if short, man without her even noticing the action.

“Who art thou?” the man asked, and Reina blinked, still very conscious of the sword point pressing lightly against her throat.

“Uh… what?” she asked.

She lost another breath when her chin raised as the point pressed marginally harder. “Explain thyself or die,” the man said. Reina definitely understood this time. “Thou comest from where?”

“Ano…” Reina murmured, amazed she could produce any sound at all. “Ano… Fukuoka…”

The man’s brow furrowed, but the sword’s pressure lessened slightly. He looked to the shorter of his companions, who stared stonily back, before turning once again to Reina. “Kyushu?”

“Yes!” Reina replied frantically, grateful to finally hear something she recognized in this beyond strange place. “Fukuoka, on Kyushu. Wait…” she said, as the thought finally hit her through the shock of the moment. “Are you saying this… isn’t Kyushu?”

The man stared fiercely back at her for a moment before shaking his head slightly. Reina couldn’t see much more than a shadow of his eyes below the rim of the helmet, but from what she could see, their gaze shined more intensely than she’d ever imagined possible.

Then, allowing her to finally draw a breath for the first time in what seemed like ages, he withdrew the sword and slid it skillfully back into its scabbard at his waist. As he reached up to take off his helmet, he said in the same clear voice, “Strange clothing thou wearest.”

Reina cocked her head, trying to decipher the words. It was Japanese, but surely the oddest dialect she’d ever heard… It seemed to fit the costumes and setting though, like it was straight out of a period drama.

Then the realization hit her once again that the man only withdrew his sword because she was obviously no threat. Having been in many dangerous situations before herself, she decided to be wary. Well, a bit at least.

“I could tell you the same thing.”

Taking the helmet off, he looked at another of his companions, who shrugged with only a slight shoulder movement. When he turned back Reina almost gasped again, but this time not from a sword. The height, the body shape, the voice, the too-handsome face – it finally completely clicked to her as she saw the shoulder-length hair held back just at the top with a comb. It was perhaps the best imitation she’d ever seen, but…

“You’re a woman!”

She only got a glimpse of the woman’s eyes widening before a ring of steel was followed quickly by two more sword points to her throat as the two companions lunged to either side of this mysterious person who must be their master. Too much in shock to hardly even regard the swords, she glanced to them as well. “You’re all girls!”

“She’s a spy,” the short one said sharply.

“If she knows our identities, she cannot be allowed to live,” the taller added.

“No!” the woman in charge said forcefully, and gestured to each of them. They withdrew their swords and returned to their spots, if a bit unsettled and with a very cautious focus on Reina.

“Ya know,” Reina said, automatically trying to defuse the tension with a winning smile. “Those swords are a hell of a way to greet someone. Would you like your boys back there to point theirs at me too? That is, if they aren’t girls too. What are you? Some kind of traveling Takarazuka-style period acting troupe?”

The three women just stared at her for a moment, the leader calculatingly and the other two cautiously, though with an air of calmly waiting for their next orders.

“You speak very strangely,” the eldest said, uneasily using language at least a bit more similar to Reina’s own. “But I do not believe you are a threat. You say you come from Kyushu. Is this some… new Chinese fashion?”

Reina barked a short laugh at that, causing the two flankers to widen their eyes, scandalized. “Of course not,” she replied. “It’s just Western.”

“Western?” the leader asked, puzzled. “From Kyushu itself? Or Korea?”

This time Reina didn’t know what to say, so she decided to change the subject. “So do you have a name?”

“You speak with his…” the short guard began in a voice wearing very thin of patience, but she glanced at the leader before continuing, “…her lordship, Takahashi no Aitarou, Commander of the Five Armies and Vanquisher of the Emishi. You would do well to learn some respect, knave.”

Reina glanced at the girl who spoke. “And you two lackeys?” She almost grinned as the anger flared up stronger in the girl’s face. Despite all her armor and toys, she couldn’t have been older than Reina herself.

“My Lord, let me cut out her tongue,” the other hissed. “Maybe then she’d learn some manners.”

However, Reina returned her eyes purposely back to this “Aitarou”’s, finding the woman still staring calmly and powerfully back. It might be a game with the other two, but with this woman… Had her heart really beat so much faster when she’d thought she was a guy?

“They are my commanders,” she replied, the two to each side looking disgruntled. “Sugawara no Shimizu no Saki,” she said gesturing to the shorter one, who stood still as a stone, “And Minamoto no Yajima no Maimi.” Reina almost smiled again. The two did not seem pleased at all to be called by what must be their feminine names.

“And I am Tanaka Reina,” Reina replied, bowing with a smirk. “Your highness…”

“Scoundrel!” Shimizu hissed. Somehow she decided the second name given would be most appropriate to think of them as.

Takahashi only seemed to take her different way of saying her name into careful consideration along with everything else she’d so far noticed about her.

Reina’s smile faded as she rose back up. “Now… can someone please tell me what’s going on here…?”

“We are bound for yon castle,” Takahashi said, seeming bemused and unconcerned with giving her more information. “It belongs to Shimizu, and will resupply us before we continue on to Heian-kyo for an audience with His Highness.”

Reina blinked. Heian-kyo? Wasn't that what Kyoto used to be called back when it was the capital of Japan? Over a thousand years ago…

“You’re serious, aren’t you?” Reina asked, her apprehension rising. Somehow, she was beginning to think this was very much not a dream.

“Come,” Takahashi said. “I would like you to join us. I wish to… talk with you for a longer time.” And without a second thought, she turned and headed back down to the soldiers waiting below.

Before Reina could even take a step she found herself half-carried and half-dragged by Shimizu and Yajima, who each grabbed one of her arms, and very tightly. “Hey there…” she protested. “That hurts!”

“You are very lucky,” Yajima growled into her ear.

“Do you want to hurt?” Shimizu asked cruelly into her other one. “If you don’t learn to behave more respectfully to your masters, I can show you ways of being hurt you will have never before dreamed. And if you let slip to anyone, anyone, that we are anything but young men and the rightful Lords of our fiefs, that offer is a promise.”

Reina felt like a sack of onions as she let herself be dragged along. If this wasn’t a dream, then either somebody was playing a huge practical joke on her, or… or… A thousand years ago…? Exactly how hard did I get hit…?

Her two escorts didn’t even notice when she fainted clean away.
« Last Edit: December 08, 2010, 10:52:13 PM by rokun »

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #1 on: September 03, 2010, 08:05:46 AM »
A Connecticut Yankee in King Arhur's Court XD

Now, I can either be an asshole about this or let you go  :lol:

Hmm, for now I think it will be an interesting story, are you going to take on a samurai theme?  If you are, I think I know where it might be going  :lol:
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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #2 on: September 03, 2010, 08:20:44 AM »
You are crazy but interesting...  :twothumbs

The title of this fic is what drew me in. I'm happy this is set in what seems to be an ancient time period. It interests me more than a story about gangs would. So will Reina end up there everytime she goes to sleep now or has she really crossed a different time period? I guess I'll get my answer in the next chapter since she fainted at the end of this one.  :lol:

You brought in the Captain and Maimi.  :wub: I expected Ai to show up with some MM members as her guards but this made me happier.  :D

Why would Ai take off her helmet when she's supposed to be masquerading as a guy? She didn't seem to expect Reina to realize she was a girl though. So she's used to people thinking she's a guy even when she's not wearing her helmet?

Wait, I forgot this... Eri  :heart: I always think of her as a ditsy girl though rather than motherly.  XD

^ Shhhh, nobody has to remember that story. XD I thought it sounded familiar, but I couldn't put my finger on it.

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #3 on: September 03, 2010, 08:40:37 AM »
^ I'm ebil XD

TBH I want to see the fact of historical significance (my interest is in Japanese History  :nervous)

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #4 on: September 03, 2010, 12:20:43 PM »
A Connecticut Yankee in King Arhur's Court XD

More like that Japanese film 'Ballad' from last year  :lol:

Seems like a fun story however, looking forward to more!

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #5 on: September 03, 2010, 01:17:46 PM »
Well, I guess I'm lucky I've never heard of either, so I won't know the plot. XD

Interesting start so far, looking forward to the rest.

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #6 on: September 03, 2010, 01:23:40 PM »
I started skimming the first paragraph... Got interested while reading the second paragraph, so went back and read the first one fully.
I read through the whole prologue and though this was really interesting and that I'm looking forward to more. I go back to the H!P fanfics page and only after reading the whole thing noticed who the author was... XD

Looking forward to another epic story from you rokun!  Though... I'm really hoping for an update for The Sword and the Dove soon. XD

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #7 on: September 03, 2010, 04:10:57 PM »
this sounds so interesting~^^ cant wait to read more~ and i kinda noticed this was hig-king enduced XDD
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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #8 on: September 03, 2010, 05:05:52 PM »
Looks good! I'm intereste about your story :on GJ:

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Yeah! High-King :mon XD: ........wait where is Yuukarin? :mon huh:

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #9 on: September 03, 2010, 06:21:45 PM »
Oh good god, you made Saki a Sugawara (the Sugawara?!), and Maimi just had to be a Minamoto, didn't she? :lol:

Jidai-geki ftw? :lol:

Sorry about the lack of coherency, I just came back from a full day's work. XD

I look forward to more, so no disappearing on us! *grabs and clings on to*

EDIT: Great, you made me sprain my brain by leading me to Japanese wiki and researching the time period orz. I hate you. :P
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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #10 on: September 03, 2010, 08:01:49 PM »
Omg Rokun xD

Historical/feudal Asia is my favorite setting and you just had to go ahead and pull through with this xDDDD

Way to drag me back to the fanfic section here, roffle xD!

Our favorite foul-mouthed yankii suddenly sent back in time~! A lot of interesting things should happen, I believe <3

We better see Maimi kicking ass with swords here xD

But more than that, Reina going yankii style with ancient weaponry should be fantastic <3

Hope to see more of this soooooon! <3

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #11 on: September 04, 2010, 03:24:34 AM »
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High King in Heian jidai?! I'm all for it :twothumbs
I can see Aichan being handsome in man clothes with long hair. It's common for man having long hair in that period, right?

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #12 on: September 04, 2010, 09:49:09 AM »
From the title I knew Reina had to be in it....but to send her back in time with Ai-chan as a handsome 'lord' in a semi High-King reunion wasn't quite what I had expected :lol: Excited though, as I smell a RenAi vibe. Though I do wonder exactly what kind of a role Eri has to play here.
Looking forward to the next chapter already :twothumbs




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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #13 on: September 04, 2010, 07:48:11 PM »
rokun....  :heart:

First off, thanks for holding off another update(?) in wait for my comment! I was planning to get all my reading and commenting done yesterday, but only managed so much before it was 3 in the morning and I was just trying to settle in bed without coughing to death. >.<

So this will be my first rokun fic, and I'm glad I get to follow this one from the beginning. Despite the fact that I'm not all that much of a Reina-in-real-life fan.  :sweatdrop: I like the awesome yankii character she is usually portrayed as in fics though, so it's no big deal.  :twothumbs
And really, as always, it's all going to boil down to the reading.  :love:

Reina in full yankii mode  :heart:

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“Of course we looked at each other!” Reina fired back. “What else do people do when they eat together?”

Don't they... just eat?
Or maybe that's just me and my eternal devotion to food.
 :lol:

So Reina was vying for position as leader of that gang then? I say Reina is too cool to be heading a bunch of batty crackheads, she's worthy of being a one-woman gang  :grin:

 :k-great: She's not afraid to send her knuckles flying at another girl (in front of her boyfriend...) either... you gotta love yourself some yankii  XD


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“You really should be more careful,” a motherly voice sounded soothingly from behind her, and she felt someone raise her shirt to lay a warm moist towel on her bruised lower back. “I don’t know why you care so much about that gang anyway.”

Motherly? My first instinctive thought = GAKI-SAN!  :shocked:

But then I wondered if you'd really be writing about Gaki-san after all our talk in the fanfics discussion thread?

Turns out to be...

 :panic:

*gasps* Eririn!
Completely unexpected, and a little hard to imagine at that... but hey, it might work if you write it well enough for readers to suspend belief  :thumbsup
Still >.< I find 'motherly' friend role to be much better suited to Gaki-san. Why didn't you simply typecast the bean, rokun?  :lol: Are you saving her for another role our turtle can't fill?


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“Actually, you haven’t had to take punishment since you officially joined Fujimoto-gumi years ago, have you? Since before Miki-chan retired…”

Fujimoto-san  :w00t:
I hope she gets to feature more in this fic than in one passing line. I find that Miki in fanfics = pure entertainment.  :inlove:

 :OMG:

She's somehow woken up and discovered she's gone back in time??? Wow, if this is where it's headed, looks like we're all in for a big treat. I don't think I've come across a time travelling H!P story yet. This should be lots of fun... (judging from all the time-travel stuff I've seen  :wub:... JIN!)


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As they closed in, Reina realized that two of them looked like very short men...

Errr.... I don't think so, Reina-chan...  :grin:


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perhaps the handsomest man Reina had ever seen...

If that's not a Takahashi, I'll be damned!  :w00t:

The contrast between their language style and Reina's rather casual deliverance of meaning...  :lol: Very well done  :twothumbs


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Reina glanced at the girl who spoke. “And you two lackeys?”

...

“And I am Tanaka Reina,” Reina replied, bowing with a smirk. “Your highness…”

Oh my Reina  XD
You'd expect somebody who's just landed herself in an extremely foreign situation to keep a grasp on her more cautionary bearings... I mean, these 'girls' do have swords after all. Reina sure is a genuine yankii, isn't she?  :P
Either that, or she thinks she's still having some kind of dream!


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Reina blinked. Heian-kyo? Wasn't that what Kyoto used to be called back when it was the capital of Japan? Over a thousand years ago…

She finally gets it?
Was she really participating in that conversation so offhandedly because she didn't suspect a thing?  :mon sweat:
Well I guess I can't really blame her... it's not everyday you wake up and find yourself at the mercy of Shakespearian-speaking beings  :nervous
But Reina could really exercise some caution...  :yep:


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"And if you let slip to anyone, anyone, that we are anything but young men and the rightful Lords of our fiefs, that offer is a promise.”

Oooooo.... what are these girls really up to?  :glasses:
Looking forward to finding out!  :shocked:

Saki and Maimi? I know faces very well, but I'm not all too clear about their personalities. Perhaps you can shed some light on that over the course of the story. ^___^

So far, so good. Definitely an intriguing premise and I would follow anyway simply because this is a rokun-written fic, and I admire all the seniors here very much.  :love:

But it's got my attention.

I want to see how much more trouble Reina can land herself in  :nervous It's going to be fun watching how our yankii is going to survive in this alien world. She's standing out like a sore thumb right now - I bet it's going to be plenty adventure for her in the coming chapters to find out what's going on!

Who else is going to be involved? Perhaps there's Eri here too! A past life of hers or something  :grin:
Would you throw in a few OGs too?  :w00t:

Great first chapter, great story orientation, great writing, great job!  :heart:

Thanks for sharing, rokun  :love:
Please update soon. I'm looking forward to MORE.
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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #14 on: September 04, 2010, 10:15:05 PM »
^ Aww, I heard you commented, but not that you would edit later. I hope you get to feeling better!!!

Was gonna reply to everyone, but I'll just do that later now after you're able to come back and post what you have to say :heart:

I see I definitely have a lot to talk about with what everyone has said. :lol:

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« Reply #15 on: September 05, 2010, 12:43:18 PM »
Ooo new fic!  with only one chapter so far!  CHANCE-SU! 

 :mon fyeah:

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“You really should be more careful,” a motherly voice sounded soothingly from behind her...
“I’m glad you’re my private best friend, Eririn,” she murmured to the girl.

wah you so aren't Reina's mama!  :shock:  I don't know why that took me by surprise but it did! XD

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“I’d never be able to live down the shame of you to the rest of them.”

LOL what the heck?  :lol:  You can do a lot worse Tanaka Reina! XD
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Grass? A village?  A castle?!

LOL the kitten fell down the rabbit hole  :usagiii:  or did she get hit really hard on the head?  :sweat:  lol or did Eri put some "special" herbs on that towel she used on Reina? XD

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The leader had to be perhaps the handsomest man Reina had ever seen.

Is it ERIC?!  IS IT?   Drats...too short sounding to be Eric....must be Ai chan then...

....lol or Aitarou  :hiakhiakhiak:

so far things that have flashed across my mind: Tamagotchi, Alice in Wonderland and Hamtarou XD

lol it's Saki and Maimi...oh man...they are so gonna turn evil aren't they?  XD

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #16 on: September 07, 2010, 12:38:09 AM »
I know I said I was going to reply to comments after Bee edited... but then I got into gaming over the long weekend. :lol: Hopefully start up some writing again the next few days at work though!

First of all... wow, thanks everyone so much for the comments! :D I haven't gotten so many since... since... well i don't know when. :lol: It's nice to feel loved. :heart:

It was interesting reading through everyone's responses. Had quite a mix of various things. :lol: My first impression had to do with impressions on the story I'm taking this from (as kuro said, A Connecticut Yankee in King Arthur's Court), and the other, mostly due to the last two posts, was Eri. :lol: We've had all too much of her crazy crackness in fics I notice. :P There's definitely more to her than you saw in this chapter... but too bad, you're not gonna actually see her much :lol:. As for who else you will see... well... you will just have to wait and see. :) It's not a huge cast though like many of my other fics. In fact, as it is now, there are plans for 8 of the girls to appear (not including Eri, and plus non-H!P historical characters). There is also a rule for who will appear in this fic that you might eventually figure out. ;) Anyway, onto personalized replies!!

kuro: What are you talking about? :lol: I intended it to be pretty clearly inspired by A Connecticut Yankee. That's part of the pun!In fact, I'm surprised more people don't know of it. Come on people! :lol: Especially if you're American, it's one of the classics by perhaps our greatest American author (Mark Twain)! XD That said, I'm not necessarily going to be following that plotline all that closely except for in a very general way (the whole Reina going back in time to court thing). This actually draws from many inspirations, mostly Japan-related history and historical works. There will be "samurai", such as what Ai, Saki and Maimi exemplify, but that system wasn't all that big a deal yet at this point in the history (I'll see if you can pinpoint when exactly it is as the story goes on and more characters are introduced... If not, then hopefully it may be a bit of a learning experience :)).

Anyway, back to Twain's work, his book was a heavy satire on America of his day. Something else this story will follow is that satirical, somewhat tongue-in-cheek not-so-serious style. :lol: So yes, maybe things might be a bit off the wall. ;)

Tuna: Yes, this is definitely not a story about gangs :lol:. I have another story like that. ;) The beginning was only to briefly set Reina up as said Fukuoka Yankii ;). Ai is not used to people identifying her as a woman as her hairstyle is in the style of a Lord of the day as well. Reina just recognized her as such because, well, back then there weren't many women cross-dressing, but Reina is quite familiar with them today and knows what to look for. :lol:

oddball: I don't know that film :lol: Maybe I should look it up for further inspiration. :)

rndy: That's all? Seriously? :lol: jk :P Well, if you don't know Twain's story, perhaps much of this will be new to you then, and I hope you enjoy it. :D

maize: Yay, I'm glad to see my writing can still drag people in even if they don't know my reputation! :lol: As for Sword... I'll update that too... some day... :ph43r:

kawaii: Hmm *looks again* Yes, I suppose it is rather High-King-ish so far, ne? :lol: It was actually unintentional. ^^; You'll see more girls pop up in the future... (and some not, as I mentioned before)

fallenxangel: No Yuukarin in this story. :lol: At least, not planned as of now. :lol: Though it's possible that could change...

Essy :heart:: I hate you too :heart:. And no, Saki is not the Sugawara. :lol: (those who are lost: you'll learn what she is talking about before long :lol:)

Yuuchan: O_O You posted!! *clings to make you stay* It must have really drawn your attention to pull you out of your semi-permanent lurk-dom. :lol: You should come around and say hi so the new people can get to know their modly mod! XD Maimi will definitely go kick-ass with swords here (Ran was one of the inspirations to this :lol:), and as for Reina... well we'll see, but I'm sure you already noticed something. :lol: I hope you enjoy the history that'll be in here! :D It'll be set in what I think is a different time from what we see a lot of things set... but as I've done the research, it seems like many interesting things still will happen. :heart: And that's beyond the stuff I'll just be creating myself. ;)

Aisacchan: Another High-King fan. :lol: Yes, I think Aichan would be very handsome as a feudal Lord or general. :lol:

Aussie: ReinAi? Where? :lol: As for Eri... well... like I said before don't hold your horses. :lol: There's still much to come though! Including maybe a surprise or two from me.

Bee: Yay! Epic comment! :D :heart: I'm sorry you're not a big Reina fan. She tends to play a big role in most of my fics. :lol: I'm beginning to understand why you haven't read them yet. :lol: And that's okay. :) Miki - again probably someone you shouldn't get your hopes up about. :lol: But yes, Reina is a genuine yankii. Plus, she feels pretty confident about herself anyway... besides the fact that she still mostly didn't believe what was happening around her was fully real lol. We'll see if she's right or not from next chapter :lol:
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Oooooo.... what are these girls really up to?  :glasses:
That really is the quote of the time. :lol: There are many plans... and I wonder how Reina will fit into them? Or will she just indeed get herself into trouble? :lol:

Sukoshi: O_O That's pretty epic yourself!!! :D :heart: I love your theories on what happened to Reina. :lol: Hamtarou. XD As for evil... hmm... No evil H!P girls here. :P They're all virginal angels!! And one more about Eri... Reina knows well what she has in her. :lol: That doesn't mean she doesn't leave her out of her yankii teasings though... ;)
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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #17 on: September 07, 2010, 04:15:13 AM »
^ I am trying to pinpoint the time period and if you manage to get something weird, I can tease you about it, I read the book in 7th or 8th grade so it might be quite a refresher reading this fic.  I know the period but is it early or later part of the period?  :lol:
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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court: Chapter 1
« Reply #18 on: September 08, 2010, 04:55:47 PM »
Hello! :D I wanted to get this out soon since there seemed so much interest in the story. :heart: In order for me to update more quickly, I think I may again try to keep the chapters a bit shorter than I have at times. XD Yet... despite the brevity... somehow this fic still seems to take forever to write. :banghead: You might see why as you read along... I'm trying to keep it simple and enjoyable to read, as well as rich in content. :)

Anyway, this chapter features two new characters, but don't worry, there is more to come. :)


Chapter 1: Castle Shimizu, Waiting Room


“Are these clothes not just the oddest things you have ever seen?”

“Somehow I actually rather like them.”

“I cannot believe you would say that! If Shimizu-sama ever caught you in something like that… Why, you would be forced to run off and become a Buddhist nun!”

“I would not count on that. The way these… leggings, if they are really to be worn as a top layer, seem to accentuate the legs, Shimizu-sama may not mind at all…”

“Shimizu-sama? …Legs?” Reina moaned, opening her eyes to take in a dimly lit chamber. Warm colors seemed to surround her on rosewood tapestried walls.

“Oh, do lay off Momo-chan. Not everyone could be as puri-puri in pink as you are.”

“But that is what I am! A puri-puri princess!”

Reina heard a sigh. “I will not get into another lineage debate with you, Momo-chan. I know very well how the Tsugunaga line is a traceable offshoot of the Genji.”

“And who is your family descended from again?” this ‘Momo-chan’ asked slyly.

“Oh look! She is awake!”

Reina had rolled her head slightly to try to identify where the voices had been coming from, and had seen two young girls. One, the taller if not by much and with amazingly long hair that hung free almost to her waist yet appeared carefully brushed out, seemed to be fussing over her jeans and t-shirt. The other, in a kosode and magenta hakama as elegant as perhaps a kosode and hakama combination could be, was staring sharply at her companion.

The taller one laid her clothes aside after noticing she was awake and drifted over to her bed. Reina was almost mesmerized by the girl’s just as elaborate burgundy hakama flowing easily around her legs, making it appear as if she really were drifting through the water toward her, or at least a gentle breeze. She’d never seen someone walk quite so… naturally in such clothes.

Suddenly she had two girls peering down at her as if she were some strange animal.

“Hey!” she cried, and sat up so quickly it surprised them and made them pull back slightly. “I don’t like people just… hovering over me like that!” Then she looked down to see the sheet fallen to her legs, leaving her thighs up to her head… completely bare.

Flushing furiously, she tugged the sheet once again tightly up against her. “And where are my damn clothes!?”

“Did you understand half of what she said?” the taller one asked, looking to her companion.

“Not a clue,” Momo-chan replied. “How peculiar…”

“Stop talking about me like I’m not here! And bring me my clothes!!” But the two girls just stared placidly back at her.

Then with a harrumph, Reina slid off the bed and paced carefully over to where they had left her clothes, very conscious of their stares ever-present on her back. Glancing back as she picked them up, she turned her head to look at them and sighed before noticing the large folding screen across the room.

She was about to run off to it before one of the girls spoke up. “We have been told to provide you with whatever accoutrements you may desire,” the taller one said. “You do not have to keep wearing such… lewd peasant clothing.”

“You do not suppose she is a Lady in disguise?” Momo-chan said in a low voice toward her friend’s ear, never taking her eyes off Reina. “The way Takahashi-sama seemed to speak of her…”

“I am no Lady!” Reina retorted.

“Surely even a Lady could not sink so far…” the haughty girl followed up in an even softer, sour voice.

“That’s it,” Reina barked, throwing her clothes down. “I don’t care if I’m naked, I’mma kick your puny ass…”

As she lunged toward the girl though, the door swung open to admit an even younger girl. Her eyes were almost as big as saucers as she took in Reina, who stopped and held the sheet tighter to herself. The red in her face was her anger at the snooty princess girl. Yeah, that was it.

“Takahashi-sama and Shimizu-sama have requested your presence in the audience chamber,” the girl piped, again still staring at Reina. Reina was beginning to get tired of all this staring.

“Of course,” the taller girl replied smoothly. “We will come presently.”

“They request the audience with… all three of you,” the girl continued, finally looking at the other two in response to the offer. “Takahashi-sama also insisted I request you outfit the stranger with proper court casual attire. ‘Three layers should do,’ were the Lord’s words.”

Momo-chan sighed. “Thank you, girl. In the future though, please remember to be more specific with your initial message. We do not want to see your pretty long hair cut off now, do we?” The girl blushed and lowered her eyes, reaching reflexively toward her hair before she caught herself.

“Oh, her hair you think is pretty…” the other grumbled. For some reason Reina was beginning to like that one at least.

“Excuse me,” Reina said, having almost forgotten that she was still standing in a sheet. “There is nothing wrong with the casual attire I already have. And my name is Tanaka Reina!”

“Oh, but we have been rude,” the taller girl said, leaning down in a deep, precise bow. Reina studied her closely, but didn’t imagine she could replicate the action if she tried. After meeting her eyes again, the girl continued, “I am Natsuyaki no Miyabi, and this is Tsugunaga no Momoko.”

Reina almost snorted a laugh at the ancient-sounding names given so seriously, but instead she nodded in return after Momo-chan bowed as well. The girls noticed right away that she didn’t bow lower, and their eyes tightened slightly.

“Nice to meetcha,” she said with a grin. “So are you the uh… servants in this place? They were going to a castle, weren’t they? Is this it?”

The girls’ eyes widened at that, and they looked at each other, but it was the young messenger who let out a scandalized gasp. “Servants!” she cried, having apparently lost control. “Natsuyaki-san and Tsugunaga-san are Ladies of the Court, and not to mention Shimizu-sama’s chief consorts!”

“That will be enough, Risako-chan,” Momo-chan chirped sternly. “You run along to Mistress Yukiko and tell her to put your hair in pigtails and give you a small doll to carry around until you better learn to control your mind.”

Risako-chan, visibly chastened, bowed her head with a rosy blush. “Yes, of course my Lady. My Lady,” she added, bowing to Natsuyaki as well before darting a glance at Reina and hiking her hakama to run out the door and down the hall before they could say more.

Momo-chan sighed. “Girls these days. Give them the best, yet they still refuse to learn proper manners.”

“You are just too harsh on the children,” Natusyaki replied off-handedly.

“Children?” Reina asked. “She couldn’t have been more than a couple years younger than you…”

The two Ladies blinked at her as if they’d forgotten she was there. “Risako-chan is in training as a lady-in-waiting,” Natsuyaki replied. “Despite the honour her station will eventually bestow upon her family, she is for now regarded as but a child to all. Relative age is irrelevant.”

“Oh,” Reina said. “Did you guys go through that training as well?”

Instead of responding, Momo-chan snapped open a fan and began fluttering it at her face, which was round with rosebud painted lips below short hair tied in an odd hooked ponytail in the back. “Who does she think we are?” she asked Natsuyaki.

Natsuyaki though considered Reina thoughtfully, and commented, “Somehow I do not believe she knows our ways. Are you truly not a Lady in disguise?” she asked Reina. “From where do you hail?”

Reina blinked a moment as she tried to decipher the girl’s words. “Um… I’m… not from around here…” As things kept becoming odder and odder, she was just about to give up putting on her normal front. It was beginning to get tiring.

“That is the first thing yet to make sense to me about you,” Momo-chan commented primly. Reina really did not like the girl.

“But we must make haste to our audience with the Lords,” Natsuyaki said. “It will not do to keep them waiting.” Then she swayed over to a table where several kimonos seemed to be very carefully laid out.

“Why do you keep calling them that?” Reina asked idly, picking at the sheet she still held to just above her chest. “Lords. I mean, they’re women aren’t they?”

Momo-chan’s look was slowly turning into a glare, but Reina had decided to start ignoring the girl. “Not a one outside of the esteemed Family, ourselves, and some select of the other ladies knows the truth of that,” Natsuyaki replied as she deliberately went through the clothing. Reina could only imagine what exactly she was looking for. “I hear Takahashi-sama gave you orders, but I also ask that you keep your lips tight on that account. As to your other question, they are titled as Lords of the Land, and so shall be treated as such.”

Reina was still confused on that point, but she decided to ask one of these “Lords” herself later. There was something else the girl had said…

Her eyes widened.

“Wait. You two are Shimizu’s… consorts?”

“Shimizu-sama,” Momo-chan hissed, but Reina continued to ignore her.

“Yes,” Natsuyaki replied. “Do you not have a Lord yourself at whichever fief you hail from? But then if you are not truly a Lady…” she trailed off doubtfully.

Reina flushed. “I certainly do not have a Lord!” she angrily protested.

“Curiouser and curiouser,” Momo-chan replied ponderingly, though not losing the glare.

“But a consort,” Reina continued, wanting to finally understand something. “You don’t mean…”

“It is an honour for us to fulfill our Lord’s needs, whatever may be required, but primarily within the bedchamber,” Natusyaki replied naturally.

You may prefer the bedchamber,” Momo-chan said bitterly. “I prefer the delicacy of poetry and the other fine arts, not to mention beauty.”

“But there is delicacy to be found in all tasks, is there not? Besides, I tell you the Chinese arts will soon be out of fashion,” Natsuyaki advised amusedly. “Perhaps our mysterious visitor here heralds the new wave.”

“Buddha forbid…” Momo-chan breathed fervently, glancing down to Reina’s forgotten clothing.

“Besides, if you allowed Shimizu-sama to pillow you as well, you may find you also truly enjoy it.”

Reina groaned as the girl finally seemed to decide on what looked like two different kimonos and a hakama. What had she somehow gotten herself into this time?

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Re: A Fukuoka Yankii in Fujiwara's Court
« Reply #19 on: September 08, 2010, 05:06:13 PM »
I knew you would sneak in MiyaSaki wherever you can. :lol:

I can see the amount of research that went into the customs and lifestyles regarding that time. Layers of kimono hmm...I remember that very well. Social status heh...

And lol even a Heian-jidai Miyabi still has a detectable yankii aura that the modern yankii Reina can pick up on eh? Lmao. That's just win lol. I expect more chaos when Reina is presented at court...hell, just getting her into that kimono would be impressive enough. :lol:

I wonder what our dear Takahashi-sama has planned for our displaced Fukuoka yankii. XD I wonder how scandalous it would be if she took Reina in as..hmm...you know. ;) Maybe not granted official status, so....

*runs to research more*

Damnit, if Gegenschein doesn't get updated on time, it's totally your fault. :lol:

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