Hero (Chapter 4 - 12/24)

[zay05ohayou]

Man... Koharu is reaaaaly traumatized... 

[tru_harmony]

hmmm...

^yeah... the kid's mortally wounded...  i suddenly remembered this person i know who had gone through something similiar... it's really hard to recover... especially in this case because it's someone she trusted and looked up to...

hmmm... people coming over after work... ... ? interesting...

[lil_hamz]

When I peered into the sunlit room, I was blown away by how gorgeous the young girl lying there looked. Sun caressed her pale skin, making it look like a shot right out of a photobook. I just stood there in awe for a few moments, taking in her youth and effortless beauty.

I really liked this bit. It totally described Koharu as I know and like her
Hopefully the people Miki want her to meet are gonna somehow help her get over this horrible experience. It's not a good thing going through life with this shadow always being a part of it

[Demon Eyes]

Found it! 

Found it! 

*Printing in Progress* 

I am so gonna lie down while reading this. 

Expect a thorough review tomorrow. 

And some cover pics, I think...

[JFC]

^
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...

[Demon Eyes]

^
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...

Adorable, aren't they?

Somehow if Morning Musume was an anime, they would be a hit...What with the senpai adoration and all.

Then I would talk about the subtext of the two that started since day one that Koharu appeared on Hello Morning.

I remember it like yesterday as i watched Mikitty restrain herself from touching Koha-chan on television.

And what was with Koharu that time really, standing right in front of the groping demon like that. It was like a rabbit snuggling in with a hungry lion.

Seriously I am praising the restraint Miki had that time.


Now for Hero....

There, on the couch under Yocchan, lay an absolutely terrified looking Kusumi Koharu.

The first thing that popped into my mind at this time was that (forgive my perverted mind) koha-chan was between Yossie's legs - if you know what I mean.

No one does that to me. NO ONE.

I could seriously see a volcano that's been dormant for years waking up.

ZOMG! A Yossie/Mikitty fight!  That is one fight I wouldn't wanna be around when it happens. poor Koharu-chan.

Yossie - the bad guy! 

Cannot comprehend!

But I guess someone had to take the role and who better than the leader to take responsibilities...

*Demon Eyes prays for Yossie*

That was the scariest night of my life.

First of all, I give you an award for writing the Koharu perspective on this.

I can't name all the emotions I went through while reading this chapter. But I know damn well that by the end, I was sicker than Yossie is supposed to be while drunk on twenty bottles of Gin. for sure.

She did something else (I’m not sure what) to my chest and it made me cry out.

I so understand this part. I remember when I fist touched myself after I accidentally stumbled upon my parents' porn. I pulled my hand away so fast and I think I swore never to do that again.

five years later when I was 16, I tried again.

So I feel the reason for crying out not from pleasure.

The bed was like lying on a cloud but not as good as when Fujimoto-san crawled onto the bed next to me and wrapped her arms around me. She rocked me to sleep, whispering to me as I held on to her.

Demon Eyes: Freezer-sama, what does the jealousy meter say about my jealousy power?
Freezer: Over 9000! And Climbing!
DemonEyes: Jeezzasu!

I wanna experience this cloud No.17 or whatever it is too!

   When I woke up, Fujimoto-san had her arm around me. I smiled because I had honestly never seen her so affectionate and nice. I watched her until she woke up.

Freezer: over 20,000 and climbing!
Demon Eyes: ....

What does Miki-sama's morning face look like? What does it looks like?!!!

Damn you lucky rascal! I know you've been through hell but but....!

So Fujimoto-san made me some toast for breakfast. It was delicious!

Freezer-sama: O...Over 45,000 and climbimg! 
Demon Eyes: Fuuuuuuck!

Mikitty's breakfast! Koha-chan you little demon!  You are scheming us aren't you?!

We were in the lobby when I was yanked towards the wall and Fujimoto-san looked me in the eyes.

Correction: We were in the lobby when I was yanked towards the wall and Fujimoto-san covered me up with her body gluing to mine from hair to mouth to chest to toes, shielding me from view. And I loved it!

 

Stop it damn it. Just stop it Demon Eyes! 
 

Was I sexually active? No.

 

Did it feel good when she touched me? NO!

 

“I want Fujimoto-senpai”

Ten fans to Kusumi-san please!

....

Why did I do this?  I’ve ruined yet another life.

Dear Yossie, never drink and drive(Ahem)

I really feel for Yossie in this fic. She is so responsible to take on the role of a bad guy. And one of that kind too!

Oh, shit. That feeling was coming back.

Must...Not...think!

I picked her up into my arms and we headed to the suite.

How come Koharu was surprised by Miki carrying her when Yossie had already done it?!

Suddenly, I felt someone’s eyes on my back.

Mikitty glare! So fierce it can be felt by even the most drunk person!

All fear the Mikitty glare.

My mind seemed to ease a bit after talking to Miki. She always knows what to say and how to say it. No bullshit and no sweet talk.

All Hail Miki!

I love you Miki-sama.

I love you strawb3rrykream!

Long live "Hero".

“Please stop…”, whimpered Koharu, her body curling like a shrimp in the bed next to me.

I am sorry Koha-chan but may you please have more nightmares!

I wanna see more gentle Miki as well.

she whimpered into my neck, her breath tickling my skin.

And so it begins!

or would she end up living with me forever?

Doesn't sound so bad to me Miki-sama!

When I peered into the sunlit room, I was blown away by how gorgeous the young girl lying there looked. Sun caressed her pale skin, making it look like a shot right out of a photobook. I just stood there in awe for a few moments, taking in her youth and effortless beauty.

Oh! How the mighty fall!

I pictured this moment and let me tell you I feel sorry for my bed!

Doh! Demon Eyesssss!

But as she sleepily made her way towards me, I violently shoved any doubts into a drawer and locked it deep in my mind.

In my follow up dream I saw Koha-chan give Miki-sama a good morning kiss.

Kyan!


I have utterly and helplessly fallen in love with this fic and pairing.

I kind of already loved it, the Senpai/Kouhai thing was really cute, especially when I saw those two acting that way in a few of the H!M episodes but his story....

Strawb3rryKream....rabu!

And finally,

“Yossy has a disorder in which she cannot control her libido”

 

“You were lucky though”, she continued, “You weren’t penetrated”

 

You...it can't be.

Strawb3rryKream-san, this fic wouldn't have anything to do with that banner that goes something like -

JPH!P Where those girls can sometimes be boys.

- Does it?!

Yossie...Libido...Penetration...

Futa 'Shining Musume' sense, tingling! 

I found a gold mine.

Hero is gold!

Thank you so much Strawb3rryKream-kun.

thank you.

Eagerly awaiting updates and more Koharu POVs.

[strawb3rrykream]

Ok, I usually do reviews when I update but I cannot ignore your comments. First of all, thank you so much for the covers!!! They are sooo pretty, especially the second one.
I'm glad you have a rather positive look on this story. Koha wasn't EXACTLY between Yossy's legs, at least not in the way I think you are thinking. She was being straddled, yes, but nothing THAT bad was going on. I couldn't do that to Koha, really I couldn't. The fight was fun to write. Koha's POV was easier than I thought it would be. We are close in age so I really just thought about how I would feel in that sort of situation. When Koha cried out, I was thinking more from fear and shock, rather than pleasure but ok. It's fun to make Miki sweet sometimes~ "Where those girls can sometimes be boys", wasn't my intention, it was more of "finger" penetration rather than THAT kind. *blushes* But it's fun to see you read between the lines and create your own sort of story. I really wasn't going for a sexual thing between Miki and Koha, just more of a relationship in which Miki protects the younger because she knows someone has to after what she's been through.
Thank you very much for all the kind words. I'll try my best to update soon.
I'm a girl, btw.....so the "-kun" is kinda Unless you think of me as masculine like that....

[Demon Eyes]

First of all, thank you so much for the covers!!! They are sooo pretty, especially the second one.

Eh heh. Thank you. I hadn't even gone over the first ten line and I was already in Photoshop.

I'm glad you have a rather positive look on this story. Koha wasn't EXACTLY between Yossy's legs, at least not in the way I think you are thinking. She was being straddled, yes, but nothing THAT bad was going on. I couldn't do that to Koha, really I couldn't.

I know strawb3rry-chan, I know. I was just making light of the situation really.

The fight was fun to write.

though it wasn't a fight really. What with Miki p'owning Yossie. But she was drunk so...

Koha's POV was easier than I thought it would be. We are close in age so I really just thought about how I would feel in that sort of situation.

OMG!

I just damaged you haven't I?

I better read the whole introduction thread before shooting my mouth off!

When Koha cried out, I was thinking more from fear and shock, rather than pleasure but ok.

I guessed that but my reviews were all crack so don't mind them much. Like I said, I cried out too the first time. it wasn't very good feeling I tell ya!

"Where those girls can sometimes be boys", wasn't my intention, it was more of "finger" penetration rather than THAT kind. *blushes*

Again with me and my big mouth. I was just fooling really. I know that is what was going on. no one has ever attempted that fit and I don't think that even I would actually.

But it's fun to see you read between the lines and create your own sort of story. I really wasn't going for a sexual thing between Miki and Koha, just more of a relationship in which Miki protects the younger because she knows someone has to after what she's been through.

I guessed just as much judging from Mikitty's reaction at Yossie's actions. but it''s inevitable that if this goes on, them living together and all that, they are bound to get closer, at least on Koharu's side of things where she will grow fond of her hero.

You have to admit Miki was like as knight In Shining armor there, No?

Also that thing with Miki and the Wall and Koharu, again just cracks. I am actually not into high rated stories. I kiss or snuggle is plenty. I keep the heavy stuff for dreamland.

Thank you very much for all the kind words. I'll try my best to update soon.
I'm a girl, btw.....so the "-kun" is kinda Unless you think of me as masculine like that....

Again, so sorry. I really hope I didn't damage you...much.

hopefully you didn't get the Shining Musume part...

Please take your time. I love this story so much I can wait for it forever.

Definitely  My No.1 at the moment.

[lollipopgirl]

Aw Demon Eyes, you're so cute *pets you*

Your comments were really entertaining to read
Don't worry about damaging her, she's already seen (read) too much *covers imouto's eyes*

LOLZ at the Shining Musume part, she better not get it!

"Where those girls can sometimes be boys", wasn't my intention, it was more of "finger" penetration rather than THAT kind. *blushes*

Again with me and my big mouth. I was just fooling really. I know that is what was going on. no one has ever attempted that fit and I don't think that even I would actually.

Correction: Check out the perv forum... SHE'S DA MAN!!!

And Kream of Strawb3rry, if Demon Eyes' comments don't make u wanna get back to the next chapter of Hero, I don't know what will! (a cookie maybe?)

[Demon Eyes]

Aw Demon Eyes, you're so cute *pets you*

Mou you are embarrassing me lollipopgirl....

Your comments were really entertaining to read

I expected a bit of bashing so I wanted to make her feel like her idea is very well appreciated, which really is.

Don't worry about damaging her, she's already seen (read) too much *covers imouto's eyes*

But I bet you my fortune not as much as I. I will save the innocence left. And....Imouto/!

You couldn't be her Anee---or are you talking about the respected kind of Onee-sama? Or is it Onii-chan. it better not be Onii-chan.

Or else Freezer-sama is gonna go mad if you have such a great imouto....

LOLZ at the Shining Musume part, she better not get it!

I am far gone, aren't I. 

Correction: Check out the perv forum... SHE'S DA MAN!!!

I decided to check it out. I have a feeling my pants will be doing the dropping.

And Kream of Strawb3rry, if Demon Eyes' comments don't make u wanna get back to the next chapter of Hero, I don't know what will! (a cookie maybe?)

A Cookie it is....Here you go you nice red sweet and juicy little thing....


Lollipopgirl: Damn it Demon Eyes! Stop thinking of my imouto like that or else...

Demon Eyes: Go...Gomen lollipopgirl...

[strawb3rrykream]

Oh no, I figured you were joking~ But I thought I'd better clarify just in case you weren't. Hehe, don't worry about my age...most ppl don't. I'm 15, if you'd like to know. Damn, I don't get the shining thing... OMFG, I get it now!!!! It's that ecchi Momusu parody manga, huh? Even I think that's a little wrong....As for my Nee-chan, we aren't blood-related but we might as well be. We met each other and found we have ALOT in common, even the same first name... So we basically go about our lives as sisters through the internet. She's right, though, I've probably seen/read/wrote more than I should at my age. *munches cookie*

@Nee-chan: KNEW YOU WERE HERE!!! Dai made a comment about loving his admin powers cuz he could see you on. I never said I wasn't gonna continue.... You of all ppl should know that I'm having trouble with it but I'm not giving up. School is just taking priority for once in my life. I'm really trying to work hard. But you know that I devote most of my free time to writing~ But a cookie would be nice too....

[Haruka]

Oh no, I figured you were joking~ But I thought I'd better clarify just in case you weren't. Hehe, don't worry about my age...most ppl don't. I'm 15, if you'd like to know.

ARE YOU 15???!!!!!! OMG xD

To young for me, I will wait until your 16 xDDDDDDD *kidding* *kidding* *gomen*


Well well every one here is very young or it's just me that I feel old xD

I'm waiting for Hero 5 =D

[strawb3rrykream]

^
Hehe, yeah, I am. You won't have to wait long, my b-day's in April. I don't think you're that old. I'm working on it!! Ganbarimasu!

[Demon Eyes]

^
Hehe, yeah, I am. You won't have to wait long, my b-day's in April. I don't think you're that old. I'm working on it!! Ganbarimasu!

Yahooo!

I am younger than you. I am younger than you!

My B-Day is in May so even if you are a decade young than me, you were borm earlier in the year so technically, I am younger!

Boohoo....Logics!!!! ^_^

Sorry, I am always attracted to this thread now whenever you post in it and I just can't leave without saying something...err...stupid *sweats*

[Haruka]

See... You are so young -_- ... Fresh Meat =D

*kidding xD*

Well well Hope you update soon cause I wanna know what happend with Yossie and Koha.. and I hope you put some YoMiki cause I'm fan ~ xDDDD

See you ~

[Kuji]

Even though this fic hasn't been updated for awhile, I wanted it to be the first one I posted a review for on the boards because it's the one I found most interesting.

(Gosh, people are going to see this post and rejoice, thinking that there's an update... and then hate me for raising their hopes, aren't they? D: )

I love the glorious angstiness of it but the best part is Miki-sama being Koharu's hero. Also the selection of the extremely hyper and childishly naive Koharu being the victim here is especially effective. I doubt any other member would have worked half as well. The surprise of the others when Miki actually allows Koharu's clingyness made me laugh. Poor Koharu though, if Miki doesn't stop being so nice, a crush is a bit inevitable isn't it (because, c'mon, it's Miki-sama)? Followed by the even more stinging rejection.

hu hu... anyway, loved it and I'm going to go try find the other things you've written now. :D

[writerjunkie]

aw no update? I happen to like this story even if it's a little dark and angst. I like those two very much. lol I've read this before, sorry I didn't comment.  I'm not really good at commenting and they're usually short like "great work. keep it up." and I don't want to leave it short like that. So I normally lurk on stories, but I do like this one and hope you can update it sometime. =)