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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap: Sakura in Gimael)
« Reply #20 on: August 11, 2015, 03:23:26 PM »
New chapter up!
It took me up awhile to think up some scenes of Rainoric being a typical Barbarian. So Dont be surprised of any trauma he may inflict in this chapter and the next.
Plus a very tense Sakura- Rainoric interaction is added to (Not familiar with writing a dramatic scene so please tell me if its good)

http://www.asianfanfics.com/chapter/edit_chapter/978407/7

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap: Sakura in Gimael)
« Reply #21 on: August 14, 2015, 03:33:23 PM »
Ok ladies and gents. Since I already uploaded a new chapter I want to get feedback and see if what I wrote is good. Any if there is any place I can polish in my writing skills. And how's my writing so far and the pacing of the story is going?

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap: Sakura in Gimael)
« Reply #22 on: August 14, 2015, 05:51:26 PM »
You know what..?

I really start liking this chapter.  :twothumbs


I mean, alright.. It doesn't have any of my faves in the story and an OOC as one of the main characters, but I guess how you put Sakura and the others into the situations and the story backgrounds of another world is good, much different than the ones you put before. Maybe because this time you get Sakura to be involved more in the story than in the other chapters before, whatever it is I like it.

hwoah... I guess these barbarians will have to learn a bit of kindness and humanity from our earthlings.... :v



be waitin' for the next chapter!

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap: Sakura in Gimael)
« Reply #23 on: August 14, 2015, 06:56:02 PM »
Ok, get the akb48 more interactions with the Gimaelics. Then watch clips of bar fights (for another chapter *wink*) then develop Hayato more.

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap: Sakura in Gimael)
« Reply #24 on: August 16, 2015, 05:00:11 PM »
Next time in the Barbarian's Cherry Blossom, The Gedriht will hunt a wild beast. Sakura will save Rainoric's life, we get to know more about a very flamboyant head-hunter and a Barfight!!!!

(Currently now starting to work on the new Chapter boys and girls.)

And I could use some more suggestions, kind words and etc.
(TY btw Cometerz48 Stay awesome)

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap: Sakura in Gimael)
« Reply #25 on: August 21, 2015, 07:22:44 PM »
As I read Cometerz48 comment, it got me thinking.... I think i will add another AKB (or Nogizaka) character in the story, just want to hear from your suggestions, give me a name and a reason why.

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap:How to NOT hunt a Geldrius)
« Reply #26 on: August 26, 2015, 03:55:47 PM »
A NEW CHAPTER IS UP!!!
With:
Monster Hunting
Culture Shock
A Psychopathic Jewelsmith
An aspiring Hayato
A Good Old Fashion Bar Fight
An Eye Popping Game of Thrones Reference
An Ironic Fighting Ballad
and my first take on a cliffhanger (hope you like my first cliff hanger ending)
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/978407/8

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap:How to NOT hunt a Geldrius)
« Reply #27 on: August 28, 2015, 06:40:23 PM »
New Poll is up! PLS vote, this survey will help me develop my story further

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap:How to NOT hunt a Geldrius) +Poll
« Reply #28 on: September 03, 2015, 04:05:17 PM »
With a surprising score of 1 each, Rainoric and Leofric are tied as my stories most interesting OC's now next poll!!! Which AKB character should I add in my story next?

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap: Sakura in Gimael)
« Reply #29 on: September 03, 2015, 04:11:38 PM »
You know what..?

I really start liking this chapter.  :twothumbs


I mean, alright.. It doesn't have any of my faves in the story and an OOC as one of the main characters, but I guess how you put Sakura and the others into the situations and the story backgrounds of another world is good, much different than the ones you put before. Maybe because this time you get Sakura to be involved more in the story than in the other chapters before, whatever it is I like it.

hwoah... I guess these barbarians will have to learn a bit of kindness and humanity from our earthlings.... :v



be waitin' for the next chapter!

So how's my chapter How to NOT hunt a Geldrius btw everyone? Currently struggling to find time to finish next half of my next chapter

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap:How to NOT hunt a Geldrius) +Poll
« Reply #30 on: September 06, 2015, 09:38:37 AM »
With half of the score in her tally.
Miyuki Watanabe wins the Survey. Now I have to figure out how to ibtegrate a 'sweetheart' girl into a planet where everyone wants to kill everyone

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap:How to NOT hunt a Geldrius) +Poll
« Reply #31 on: September 06, 2015, 11:00:29 AM »
Well, I haven't give fedbacks yet on the last chapter. So I guess I'll do so now  :nervous

Oh geez... I guess these barbarians have a sense of fashion with those hanging heads on waist. Poor those who lost their heads   :shocked :shocked
With Sakura and Paru explaining about the Cherry Blossom and it's correlation with Sakura's name, I was hoping for a hint of romance going there but... well I'll wait I guess.

Holy dudes, the girls got caught in the bar fight? Sakura and Hayato are still underage and yet they're in one.. and somehow Sakura's singing works like an energy boost for the gang  :shocked :shocked

PARUUU!!! Too exhausted probably but I hope she's fine...

Thanks for the update. Have you seen my PM yet? I think I sent it around a two weeks ago, might wanna check it, boy.

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (New Chap:How to NOT hunt a Geldrius) +Poll
« Reply #32 on: September 11, 2015, 07:09:22 PM »
Good News guys! Im going to add 2 or 3 AKB members into the story! Still decising who thou.

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (Chap: Hayato the Anstrutrione)
« Reply #33 on: September 14, 2015, 12:34:12 PM »
NEXT Chapter UP!
Hayato becomes a Winged Hussar who literally rides Shotgun!
Another Fight started by the Gimaelics
(Paruru is OK (Thank God))
We learn more of Rainoric's Motivations and Future
Sakura receives a Vision of the future
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/978407/9

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (Chap: Hayato the Anstrutrione)
« Reply #34 on: September 14, 2015, 05:09:22 PM »
Im also working on writing a Diary that Sakura would write on of her adventures in Auriga.
I also have big plans for plot motivators for both Rainoric and Sakura.
But dont worry, the other AKB girls will also have their own stories to tell.

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (Chap: Sakura's Journal #1)
« Reply #35 on: September 25, 2015, 05:11:34 AM »
Bonus Chapter that I made! The Next chapter is already in development mind you!
BTW mates, On October 12 I will go to Europe for a vacation so dont expect any updates other than the next chapter to appear.
Check out my instagram and see the pics I will take in Europe so I wont feel lonely.

The Bonus Chapter:http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/978407/10

Sakura writes a diary of her Travels (Since she is a good writer)

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (Chap: Sakura's Journal #1)
« Reply #36 on: September 26, 2015, 04:55:12 AM »
To the man or woman who gave me a 5 on the poll

You just made my day  :hip smile:

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (Chap: The Forest and the Dream)
« Reply #37 on: October 02, 2015, 06:16:40 PM »
New Chapter up fellow companions.
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/978407/11


A forest
Sakura gets Coma'd
We learn some history of the Gimaelics (I referenced the Franks)
Gizzur tries Ventriliquism
Paruru gets a beard
Rainoric being a Badass again
An AKB48 girl with a Machine Crossbow

And walking in the city and say 'What up I killed a Dragon from the inside. Look at the heart I got from it'.
And some Humor (That I need to ask if its good?)

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (Chap: The Forest and the Dream)
« Reply #38 on: October 02, 2015, 06:49:29 PM »
Well.... XD I got what I wanted XDo

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Re: The Barbarian's Cherry Blossom (Chap: The Forest and the Dream)+Poll
« Reply #39 on: October 07, 2015, 06:35:47 PM »
Updates will slow down a bit while im in Europe. Will try to update while im there

Plud I dreamt tht Gekirara challenged Rainoric to a fist fight


And it was not civilized...

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