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Maimi Vice [Up: Chapter 5]
« on: April 21, 2007, 10:06:28 PM »
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Re: Maimi Vice
« Reply #1 on: April 22, 2007, 12:16:23 AM »
Nice Fic!

I didn't notice the "Maimi" in your title until I read the chapter again. I feel stupid ;O

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Oh God, do I love her smile. I just gave her a nod and a little smile and she walked off. I was a little glad she left; it was going to be hard to bring up a conversation with her after I had been thinking about her for a while. It didn’t bother me that I was alone again.



So uh, this is... a Airi x Maimi ehh?
It's GETTING to be so C-UTE!
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That pocky moment that I shared with Maimi was one of my favorite memories with her.

Awww. That's cute too.

I like this fic. Now go read my fic :3
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Re: Maimi Vice
« Reply #2 on: April 22, 2007, 01:14:39 AM »
Maimi X Airi Pocky moment FTW!

I wonder how Airi will feel/react if she sees Maimi's PB  ;)




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Re: Maimi Vice
« Reply #3 on: April 22, 2007, 05:32:43 AM »
Bam! 1st!


Airi didn't show any affection at all in this Chapter eh...?

Maimi also thinking about her too .. mainly
this is sooo going to be a MaimixAiri fic :3
                               
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Re: Maimi Vice
« Reply #4 on: April 22, 2007, 12:39:45 PM »
I can't tell who's who in Berryz, but I'll follow this fic, because you're the writer.  ;) Keep it up.

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Re: Maimi Vice
« Reply #5 on: April 24, 2007, 12:14:54 PM »
I am officially stalking this fic now. XD
I love Berryz (that's not the point, I'll get to it. XD) and with that love, generally comes a respect and eventual growing love for C-ute, too. <3
And, since this happens to be centered around two of my favorite members of C-ute (and couples them, no less -squee-), it has caught my attention.

Plus it doesn't hurt that the way you write is nice, either. :3
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Re: Maimi Vice
« Reply #6 on: April 25, 2007, 08:40:09 PM »
FeverInducedMadness : Hey, thanks for the review. You being more of a Berryz fan doesnt hurt at all, I love both of those groups(C-ute a little more).

Plus it doesn't hurt that the way you write is nice, either. :3

Thanks for that part too.Since this is my first real fic ,I find it kinda frustrating on what to write, but that made me happy.

I'm working on a rough draft of chapter 4. It might be up by friday or so.
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Re: Maimi Vice
« Reply #7 on: April 25, 2007, 09:03:17 PM »
Thanks for that part too.Since this is my first real fic ,I find it kinda frustrating on what to write, but that made me happy.

A good thing to do in order to keep yourself from getting blocked is to make an outline of your story. Write little snippets for each chapter, describing what you want to happen in that chapter. It helps keep stuff organized, and it works pretty well for me. <3
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Re: Maimi Vice
« Reply #8 on: April 26, 2007, 01:24:10 AM »
I don't read so many fanfics, but I'm interested in seeing where this goes :heart:

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Re: Maimi Vice
« Reply #9 on: April 28, 2007, 12:12:24 AM »
this is looknig pretty interseting so far, keep it up! ^^

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Re: Maimi Vice {Chapter 4}
« Reply #10 on: April 28, 2007, 10:08:23 AM »
Awww, that's terribly cute, I love it :heart:

I rofled at Yurina flicking the thong, haha!

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Re: Maimi Vice {Chapter 4}
« Reply #11 on: April 28, 2007, 10:56:57 AM »
Poor Airi. The two towers really put her in some really awkward situations :shy2::wahaha:

Maimi to the rescue! Yay! :cool1:

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Re: Maimi Vice {Chapter 4}
« Reply #12 on: April 28, 2007, 08:41:16 PM »
Hey thanks for the reviews.
It took me awhile to think about which awkard situations those two should put Airi in. I laughed at it myself also.I'm currently brainstorming for chapter 5
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Re: Maimi Vice {Chapter 4}
« Reply #13 on: April 30, 2007, 08:14:22 PM »
Lmao Yurina flicked a thong haha


Damn it, your story has more reviews than mine haha :D

I'm not a good attention grabber, I gotta do better than that now ;D

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Re: Maimi Vice {Chapter 4}
« Reply #14 on: May 01, 2007, 09:23:05 PM »
lol. Oh my, Airi got kidnapped by Hello! Project's human lighthouses.

I just about died during the thong part... XD

And and and and then at the end when they were feeding each other... ;_; So cute. <3

I anticipate the next chapter. :3
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Re: Maimi Vice [Up: Chapter 5]
« Reply #15 on: May 07, 2007, 01:03:22 PM »
Haha, great chapter :heart: :heart:

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Re: Maimi Vice [Up: Chapter 5]
« Reply #16 on: May 08, 2007, 01:37:50 AM »
ROFLMAO~! Animal sex... XDDD What a mind you have, Momochi...

This chapter was really, really cute. <3 Like, I had no trouble believing that that would be the way the girls would spend their vacation time. ( I bet they don't get a lot of that, either. ;-; )

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Saki and Captain raced back and forth.

I read that line over and over again, and I wondered if you made a typo before I remembered about C-ute's Saki. XDD I always forget about her. lol

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Re: Maimi Vice [Up: Chapter 5]
« Reply #17 on: May 08, 2007, 02:27:27 AM »
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Still feeling a bit upset, Yurina rushed over to Momoko and started slapping her, and once again, Risako joined in on the action. This is probably gonna go on for awhile, so I decided to land a couple of slaps on Momoko myself.

i died :lol: nice  :D

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