Hulallala, nice story^^, Please update soon^^
Acchan: Yuko, count how much we got inside.
Yuko: Let's me see
Rena: So?
Yuko: Fuck this shit! 5 dollars
TEN SHOTS!!! :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty: :shifty:
THREE PAIRINGS!!! :wriggly: :wriggly: :wriggly: :wriggly: :wriggly: :wriggly: :wriggly:
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PROLOGUE
"Catch her!! Don’t let her run away again!" Takamina shout it out loud.
All the police obeyed Takamina’s order, they rushed into a building.
"Hey, 5 of you!" She pointed the police who stand behind her. "Follow me. We will get in from another side door." Takamina take her gun.
"Yes, sergeant!!"
I will capture you this time, you can’t running from me forever. She smirked.
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"Hey, Maeda!! What do we gonna do now?! The police already surrounded this place."
"Don’t worry Sayaka, we already through this for years. I know her strategy." She smirked. She's a fool sergeant. She turned her head, "Yuko!!"
"Yes, Maeda!!"
"Put a timer bomb in that door. We gonna blow it up when the police reach this room." Maeda pointed a door in front of them.
Yuko did it as Maeda said.
"Rena, are you sure that you already sabotaged all CCTV cameras in this building?"
That girl, who called as Rena put down her glasses. “Are you doubting me? Of course I’ve done it. I’ve finished it about 10 minutes ago.” She put her lollipop into her mouth.
"Geez, Why don’t you tell us?! We can bring this money before the police came here. Urgh." A girl with tomboyish look seem annoyed.
"I said… don’t worry. Sae and Sayaka, both of you… bring this money out. I already prepared an ambulance outside this building, ride it." She grabbed a bag and threw it to Sae. "Change your clothes. Ah, the key in that bag too."
Sae and Sayaka nodded their head, they carried 4 huge bag and walk from another door.
"Done!"
"Great job, Yuko. Now, you can follow Sae and Sayaka too."
"Bu-but.. how about you?" Yuko seems worried.
"Trust me." Maeda nodded to convince Yuko.
Yuko give her a smile, “Okay.” She grabbed a huge bag. “Guys, lets go!!”
7 man nodded, the put their gun back into their pocket and carried the rest of bags on the floor.
After they went out from that room, Maeda looked at Rena, “Hey, are you ready?”
She took her lollipop out from her mouth, “Anytime.” She put it in again.
Maeda smirked, “Bring them in.”
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"Are you kidding me, Mayu?!" That girl is very angry and then she hit a table.
Mayu shook her head, but her expression looks so flat, “No, Matsui-san.”
"Why she did that?! She ruined our plan!!!"
"This’s not the first day you knew Minami, right?" Mayu grinned.
"SH*T!! She’s so greedy!!!"
Mayu laughed. “Save your anger." She looked at her watch, "Hey, It’s already 4 PM!” Mayu looks excited. “It’s time to watch my favorite anime. See you tomorrow, Jurina.” Mayu turned back.
"MAYUUU!!!!!!"
But Mayu ignored Jurina and keep went out from that room.
Jurina didn’t believe about what happened now. She grabbed her hair with both of her hands.
H-How can I work with them?! This team is a mistake… I’m in the same team with a manga lover girl and a greedy leader??!!! "Anyone… please kill me now.."
================= END OF PROLOGUE =================
I didn’t put Yuki in this prologue, but.. she’ll be here too.
Thanks for your support.
I give you my first fanfic that more longer than 4 shots. :P
Omg it so cool, please update 'Atsumina' i hope there will be Wmatsui and Mayuki :twothumbs
Omg it so cool, please update 'Atsumina' i hope there will be Wmatsui and Mayuki :twothumbs
now 10shots ? WOW
anakpanti-san you'r my fav author ! Tx for this new story
:D
CHAPTER 1 where are u?? :whistle:
update soon :on gay:
I really wanna update it today. But... I can't open my tumblr since this afternoon. I save all my drafts in there. :mon headbang:
Sorry to make you wait.. :(
Wa~ 10 shots Yahoooooo!!!!!!!
Waiting for your chaper 1 \^o^/ (you're one of my favorite author you know *wink* XD )
thanks for update :grin:
LOL, Yuko can unlock anything :lol:
if NyanNyan is on your fic, i bet yuko will unlock nyannyan bathroom's door or bedroom :wahaha:
and i hope minami will capture acchan's heart quickly :shifty:
Hi, all. :)
Many of you asked about Yuki's character...
I wanna make it clear... Yes, she's in Maeda Team..
I won't make it as a secret or a surprise because I have other suprise for you. XD
Yup, relationship between 'bad' and 'good' always interesting to be read/watched. :P
Ehmm... Sae's individual ability is not 'carried a lot of stuff at once' like Rena said before. Rena just wanna teasing Sae. :lol:
Her ability will be told in next chapter (maybe).
Yuki's individual ability is ..........
Many of you asked about Yuki's character...
I wanna make it clear... Yes, she's in Maeda Team..
I won't make it as a secret or a surprise because I have other suprise for you. XD
thanks for update :grin:
LOL, Yuko can unlock anything :lol:
if NyanNyan is on your fic, i bet yuko will unlock nyannyan bathroom's door or bedroom :wahaha:
and i hope minami will capture acchan's heart quickly :shifty:
Great as always XD XD
I hope Yuki is not Sae's ... girlfriend ....
Well, I believe in your Title, so I'm hoping for Mayuki ... :lol: :grin:
But I think Yuki will have a cool role ~ XD
Mayu is shy in front Yuki
Yay it Mayuki
Hope Acchan fall in love Takamina
Can't wait to see new Ch
:deco:
Another great story you have here Tianne o/
Ten shots you say. I'm really impressed about how well you handle your stories in a way you can say how much chapters you need to finish them :3
Thank you for one more great fic and I'm anxiously waiting next part ;)
WMatsui's first meeting is interesting. LOL at Rena. Completely showing her evil side while watching the movie. :lol:
Takamina is so persistent in making Acchan as a friend. Maybe she fell for Acchan already. :D
My Mayuki... I don't know what to say... Yuki is playing with Mayu's feelings! :OMG:
Jurina's meeting with Rena is cute..
Takamina is persistent to befriend Acchan, usually (in other fic) it's the other way around..
Eh...Yuki is playing with Mayuyu's feeling???
What will happen next??
Update soon.. :bow:
Hmm... about Mayuyu and Yuki.... there's still alot of chapters left.
Everything can changes. :P
Minami is so persistent... to get to know Atsuko
Who is this friend that betrayed Atsuko and others?
Eh... Yuki is a spy for Atsuko... why?
And Yuki with Mayu already? That's fast...
What's going to happen next?
Can't wait to find out
Thank you for the update
:twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
@zita : I'm not decide about Mayuyu yet. But actually, I don't wanna hurt her too much. Is it better for her to didn't know about SaeYuki's date?
Why maybe? She will
Why Sae and Rena always fighting? LOL
I wonder what happened in the past..
And the one playing guitar and singing at the end is Jurina, isnt it?
Thank God that you put what pairings will have a moment.I just can't stand Saeyuki.
Yuki... I hope she at least start to have feelings for Mayu and betray Maeda.
And about the betrayer that will appear in Ch 6 is it Kojiharu? It's just a wild guess. Yuko is acting like she is the one who got hurt the most at the old betrayal I guess. What am I saying, there is even no Kojiyuu beside the title.
RENA SAMA WAS MY ULTIMATE OSHII remember when I wrote "I Will Give My Heart For You". You almost angry at me because she's dying and you 'yell' at me to not kill her. :on lol:
Saeyuki was rather cute~ nothing against the couple, but I prefer saeyaka :p I just hope that Sae don't end up heartbroken that badly... considering her behavior...
@edogawa4869 : Last week.. you asked SaeYuki moment to me, and I already wrote it. I hope you like it. :)
@BbSis " Granny..... Hi. :DQuoteSaeyuki was rather cute~ nothing against the couple, but I prefer saeyaka :p I just hope that Sae don't end up heartbroken that badly... considering her behavior...
What do you mean about Sae behavior? :P
Ano... I never wrote SaeYaka before. Because both of them so tomboyish, I kinda confuse to write them. I think that I need your advice again. :p
Anyway, Rena's character here is unique,
she's so bitch but smart.. :twisted:
@Konoe : SaeYuki... about break-up... Sae is a 'possessive' girl, it isn't easy to make her break-up with Yuki.But it will end with Mayuki right? I will not take back my words. I will believe in your Mayuki.
About Shinyuu Trio and the betrayer, this is could be called as a spoiler, but.... It's okay.Is this the chapter you said Mayu will do something brave? :? If that is the case then I am really looking forward for Yuki falling in love with Mayu. :mon evillaff:
Shinyuu Trio will meet the betrayer (Maeda Team's old friend). They will confront her... and accidentally MaYuki will be there too while those things happened.
@Konoe : Ohh.... about that, it will be added in chapter 6.2 XD:mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff: :mon evillaff:
“I always know that Yuki is your favorite. Our friendship didn’t mean anything to you. You always forget that I’m the first one who support you from the beginning. Since you’re still nothing!!”Eh? What did she mean? Does Acchan hurt Rena too in the past?
More wmatsui please~:kekeke:
Jurina will teach rena how to played guitar. Proxymity~
Touching hand puhahahaha~ and and~ kissing scene~
Ehh??!! Yuki!!!! :angry:I still love Yuki.... she's soooo seductive. :mon inluv:
She's with Rena in the past? Now she's with Sae and Mayuyu
Yuki I hate you!!
LOL xD
but i wonder who is the girl in rena's past life???She's Yuki. :cry:
@edogawa4869 :Quotebut i wonder who is the girl in rena's past life???She's Yuki. :cry:
I guess.... I've hurt her too much.Eh! Of course you hurt her too much you baka! How can you realize it just now?
Ehhhhh....Yuki start to fall in love with Mayu??Wh-why? You didn't like it?
the three man who Mayu saw I guess are Sae, Sayaka, and Yuko ganging up on Haruna,right??You perfectly can read my mind. XD
And, what happen to Takamina's lunch with Acchan??I'll write in in Chap 7. :)
I guess Acchan finally know that Takamina is a police, right??
She doubt,hope she realized her feeling fast.so she could choose whether she will protect mayu or not.Yup, I agree with you, Yuki have to make her decision faster... I mean..... before it becomes too late.
I felt scared about mayuki.each chapter make me scared.i feel something bad will happen soon
Just dont hurt rena sama and yuki hime
I wonder if haruna had a deal with mariko on the past?Hmm... chap 7 or 8? Sorry... I haven't decide about it yet. :P
How about you update this tommorow morning? (what a selfish request)That is a really selfish request. :lol:
Whitehawk san i though the same about kojiharu haThere's a reason. Don't worry... ;)
Because it just no sense she betray without reason
Ah cotto! Just now i imagining wmatsui is like mr and mrs smith puhahaha!Umm... Geki-san, I already imagined it since I wrote the prologue.
Rena is jolie and jurina is brad
AWESOME
And i imagine the battle between wmatsui LOl
But I got a feeling that Kojima betrayed them to save them?You have a good eye. XD
Rena already slapped Yuki, maybe later Sae and Mayu will slap Yuki too? XDI will REALLY think about it. Thanks for your idea. :lol:
Hmm, what if Mayu already know if Yuki is a spy but she try to make Yuki fall in love with her so she can make Yuki betray her team? Since she's smart. xDMayu didn't know about it, not yet. As I wrote in my spoiler.. 'the truth' in chap. 7
Who is the woman that being beaten up?What a great question. XD
Haruna or Mariko?
Who are the ones that beat the woman up?Umm... The shorter girl Yuko ; The taller girl: Sayaka ; The 3rd man: Sae. :)
Was it Atsuko's?
Yuki why are you suddenly seducing Rena? You player! :thumbdown:Later, I will make Yuki's image become: She WAS a player. :lol:
I feel so sorry for Haruna. Got beaten by Sae, Sayaka, and Yuko. :cry:Yup, everything that happened to us will be caused a good impact and a bad impact.
But because of that incident Yuki realized she doesn't want Mayu to die. She needs more push to really admit that her true love is Mayu.
Sae is the one who almost killed Mayu right? That girl is too possessive! :smhidSae is a possessive girl, I agree with you.
i dont know why, but yuki give me chills!! XD*cough* I guess... I know what's you mean. *cough*
Yuki still fliring with RenaFlirting without love..
Yuki scare to lost Mayu... It this mean she love Mayu :?Yuki still doubt about it.
Damn!! Why Sae left her girlfriend with me?! Doesn't she know that her girlfriend is totally dangerous and..... seductive?
I just discovered awful/good thing I became addicted on yours stories.What did you find?
eeeeeh????? wait a second...Taller man is Sayaka ; shorter man is Yuko ; 3rd man is Sae.
what happen with this man?? who they are?
and what about the lunch atsuko get angry or something did she know now that minami is cop?? i guess...
Somehow think about wmatsui make me smile and happy,make me forgot how depressed when i think about my dear mayukiWell... in chap 7, wmatsui relationship still works well. Let's see what will happen to them later. :P
so suddenly and what the different between mayu ,sae and rena that could make yuki fall??I will write about it later... we still have 3 chapters left. :P
Ehh? Makoto!! -Who is Makoto? xD- How dare you to betray Maeda's team!! :angry:Umm... I already wrote a tiny part about him (in end the end of chap 4). He's Acchan and Yuki old friend.
Mariko is dead :OMaeda Team already knew the murderer (from CCTV), but it seems Taka team didn't know about it yet.
Now Maeda's and Taka's team are searching for the killer, right?
Maybe they'll meet and then work together XD
and wonder if...Jurina's bracelet was there in mariko's house...probably...Rena? or Geki?The murderer put it into Mariko house.
or Jurina visited Mariko before Mariko was dead?
OMG. The Wmatsui Scene is so :panic: :bleed eyes: . now wait for Atsumina scene (?) :lol:Yes, of course. Just wait. XD
I thought Sae stole Yuki from Rena but it turns out Yuki cheated Sae with Rena!We can't trust Yuki anymore.. she's a bad player. :P
But looks like without jurina on takamina side,Don't worry... we have Yuko.. the 'unlocker'. :lol:
since she's on the jail??
But wait did she want go to jail when she know she's not the murder?
Rena must be sad. how she face jurina?Simple... maybe she will smack Jurina's head and then she'll pointed her gun onto Jurina's neck, afterwards she'll say: "Why don't you tell me about your job before you asked me out?!!" :lol:
What if mayu was the real evil here,like she was the daughter of yakuza or spy from another country 'THE HECK!!!':lol: Don't worry, I won't make my story become too complicated like that. :)
Part 8,9,10Thank you. ;)
I amazed how you make it! 10 part and it already planed well!
The scene on the prologue is in this part 7! Wow i though it will be on the last part!Umm... that's not my climax. :P
@gek geki : G-geki san.. this is the longest comment that you ever made for me (ignoring about the 'enter'). I got teary. :cry:QuoteBut looks like without jurina on takamina side,Don't worry... we have Yuko.. the 'unlocker'. :lol:
since she's on the jail??
But wait did she want go to jail when she know she's not the murder?QuoteRena must be sad. how she face jurina?Simple... maybe she will smack Jurina's head and then she'll pointed her gun onto Jurina's neck, afterwards she'll say: "Why don't you tell me about your job before you asked me out?!!" :lol:
@gek geki : G-geki san.. this is the longest comment that you ever made for me (ignoring about the 'enter'). I got teary. :cry:QuoteBut looks like without jurina on takamina side,Don't worry... we have Yuko.. the 'unlocker'. :lol:
since she's on the jail??
But wait did she want go to jail when she know she's not the murder?
EHHH!!?? Really!!!??
How could you! :angry:I'm sorry... but she's only a cameo here. :(
kill mariko! GOD!! :cry:
i mean, yuko will do it?? why?? why maeda team wanna help jurina? she's nothing to do with them? if jurina keep on jail let's just keep her on jailIt's already explained in chap 8.1
or maybe it's rena request???
about yuki,sae and mayu it's complicated right??It makes me feel complicated as well. :bleed eyes:
I'm sorry if I can't help you with it. I'm a bad person, aren't I?No, you're not.. I still need it, but maybe not in this fanfic anymore. :P
Finally caught up with this. AND Maeda Team knew about their respective partners~ Wonder who's the killer? Wait a sec...The killer isn't from AkB members, relax. :P
YOU KILLED MARIKO-SAMA!!!! WHY?! QAQ
See you in the next chapter for a more rewarding commentsNo... this comment is really funny. I give you a huge thank you for that. :lol:
G-Guys... it's not me!Like... seriously, everyone knows that it's you. :lol:
Thanks for full chapter. :kekeke:I'm glad you read it. :w00t:
No!!!! Mariko-sama!!!! Why?!!! T_TAgain.... sorry. :bow:
I hope u will update it fast
Waaaa....update soon...Maybe... Just maybe, I'll take more time for 8.2 because I wanna write all pairings more detail. :)
Next on Takamina team vs. Maeda Team (2):Yes! yes! yes! Part 2 please XD
WMatsui, MaYuki, AtsuMina moment, and a little bit KojiYuu (you've wait it, ne? *grinned*)
The Messy Collaboration (*facepalmed*)
"I love you, Rena... even until now and after you did this to me.":wub: Don't worry Jurina, Rena loves you too~
"mouu... I want my Rena-chan who untie me.":rofl: Rena-chan~ Untie her~! :lol:
"Trust me... I'll looking for you, wherever you go I'll keep trying to catch you until I die, Yuki. I won't let you go so easily like today.":wub:
KYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:cathappy: :cathappy: :cathappy: :cathappy: :cathappy: :cathappy: :cathappy: :cathappy: :cathappy: :cathappy:I CAN'T SAY ANYTHING!!!
TOOO CUTE!!!!
I LOVE THIS COLABORATION!!!!!GOD!! HOW I HOPE YOU UPDATE THE NEXT PART RIGHT NOW!!!
GOD!! HOW I HOPE YOU UPDATE THE NEXT PART RIGHT NOW!!!I can't... :cry:
Oh, btw, Jurina is so sweet~You quote Jurina and Mayuyu's dialogue.Quote"I love you, Rena... even until now and after you did this to me.":wub: Don't worry Jurina, Rena loves you too~Quote"mouu... I want my Rena-chan who untie me.":rofl: Rena-chan~ Untie her~! :lol:
Oh! Mayuyu too!Quote"Trust me... I'll looking for you, wherever you go I'll keep trying to catch you until I die, Yuki. I won't let you go so easily like today.":wub:
I don't care if Kojiyuu is just little as long as they have one!!!I never write about them before, but I'll try to make it sweet. :D
i hope from now on this will be kojiyuu (wishful thinking, day dreaming, fantasizing) :bow:It's hard because... you know..... Mariko just died, I doubt that Kojima will falling in love again that fast.
Is it just me or does Acchan still love tkmn?It's hard for Acchan to show her true feeling, she's a leader...
honestly, I want takamina to be look stupid but actually she's pretty smart!Wow... you have a great idea. I'll think about it. XD
Cute!Really? I'm glad... because I feel that this chap is too serious. :P
I mean cuteness overload!!
Beside the serious case,the way it happen to takamina team was funny LOL
How could jurina being relax and act like cute puppy aww,make me wanna hug her! Cute!!! How can rena resist it?? LOLRena is a tsundere. She act like that all the time. :lol:
Even takamina and mayu feel ashamed by jurina act! LOL
The trio police was cute and funny.i wonder how long acchan,yuki and rena could stay cool and ignore them...their cutenest is like a bomb!It won't last long. because it's already chap 8. :lol:
I like how wmatsui here.It's exactly same like what I think.
Even though they are enemy,they wont deny their feeling,they being honest.just need to settle a moment and time.they just felt awwkward and weird after knew the truth
Putri-san whatever in the future just dont ever hurt rena.if it jurina is fine lol because i never see jurina in action.she need to show some skill! LOLAbout Jurina's action. Next chap... there will be a training session.. Let's see how good Jurina is. (Spoiler. :banghead:)
i know my comment is not good as others,my english is suck! But hope u know what i meanNo!! I always fall in love with your comment. :wub:
no spoiler you're not gonna say what will happen next chap O.OAhh.. I forgot. :sweatdrop:
Yuki chose Mayu... Yeah...Wh-why? You seems didn't like it. :P
Poor Sae... for being dump even after being a great girlfriend for YukiSometimes... love can become really cruel. :cry:
Would they be able to put everything in the right place?That's my job. O0
Would they be able to kill or arrest the drug lord?
I just have a word to describe this chapter: PERFECT.Thank you. XD
About Sae.. I-DON'T-CARE 8)Ah, my SaeYuki feeling. :cry:
i still can believed mariko is dead *sighI still can believe it too.
o god i want more more more atsumina wmatsui and mayuki ahaha*cough* Just to remind you, there are only 2 chapters left. :P
Poor Sae... Who will help ger from this depression? Sayaka...Twins Tower coupleI want Sae be happy too. :cry:
it a little bit weird when i want to know more about Kojiyuu couple than the other, even though i'm Atsumina shipper XDI wonder about them too.
Ahh... This is my favorite part, answering my readers comment. :mon fan:
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@koneki :QuoteI just have a word to describe this chapter: PERFECT.Thank you. XDQuoteAbout Sae.. I-DON'T-CARE 8)Ah, my SaeYuki feeling. :cry:
Jurina felt Rena's heartbeat. It beating rapidly... "Then... what should I do?":twothumbs
Rena came closer to Jurina. "Kiss me slowly."
"I think that I want to stay by your side until I can always be the last thing on your mind before you go to bed.":wub: I didn't know if Taka can be this sweet~ :D
@mikaellitsa :
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o god i want more more more atsumina wmatsui and mayuki ahaha
*cough* Just to remind you, there are only 2 chapters left. :P
I need more atsuminaI'll give it to you in last chap. :P
mariko is dead.kinda sad because i want know more about mariharu moment..Okay, I'll write it in special chap. :)
I feel sad for Yuko. Kojiharu still loves Mariko-sama.Should I make them as a couple? But I didn't write KojiYuu on my title. :lol:
This chapter got lots of sweet moments. I love it.Solved? Not yet. :P
The love problems are solved... for now(except Kojiyuu).
Only two chapters left plus an omake about Maeda's team... Although I want more I don't want it to end sooner. :cry:I can't write this more longer. It's only 10 shots but head already exploded. :bleed eyes:
Sorry XD I hate saeyuki ~~~ I'm a MaYuki shipper :PYeahh.. I know it since I wrote 'What should I do?'... you refused to read it. :P
I only read saeyuki when WMatsui is in the same story as main couple
Okay, no AtsuYuu fight?!Do you mean... they fight each other? Okay, I'll give it to you in next chap.
Eh? Taka is a boy? LOL! I thought she's a girl in this story :lol::shocked No... she's a girl. People in the restaurant mistook Takamina with a boy because she hide her hair in the cap.
Takamina always boiled everytime someone mentioned about her height. "Hey! I didn't make her pregnant!" She took off his hat. "I'm a girl!"XD
How can Jurina shoot so accurate like that with her eyes closed? :shockedActually... she's really good in fight stuff and in using a gun... but I never write about it more. Maybe next chap. :D
Mayu really love Yuki eh? That's too easy for Yuki. She didn't even need to try to get Mayu back xDI didn't want to mention it but...... Yuki will get her punishment later. :)
Why I want Yuki at least feel how hurt is it to be two-timed xD She's so heartless :smhid
She already hurt 3 people OMG LOL xD And she didn't even feel guilty or something?
Make it more chapters! :shifty: :shifty: :shifty::bleed eyes: It's the 2nd time for me that my readers wanna stabbing me. :lol:
:kneelbow: + :shifty:
LOL...
Only thing which is bothering me is Yuko. :(Yuko already had some hard time long before MaYuki, AtsuMina, and WMatsui exist.... it'll be revealed in special chap. :(
I want Mayu to be the more cool in this story!!!! (I don't her to be cool with her brain...) A gun!!!! Like she is a sniper!!! Ouahhh!! :bleed eyes:Why do you tell me about this when it almost ended?? :cry:
But no! You already have the plot XD
I won't say that I don't really care about Sae (LoL I say it uhuhu :lol: )Even though some of my readers didn't really care about her, I can't let my character desperate without any explanation until the story ended..
@Konoe :QuoteI feel sad for Yuko. Kojiharu still loves Mariko-sama.Should I make them as a couple? But I didn't write KojiYuu on my title. :lol:
When the part 9?? :cry: :cry: :cry:okay.. okay, don't cry... I'll post it on Sunday. XD
I had waterfall on my eyesOh, come on... you already knew how it ends. I think it's not too sad for you anymore. :P
Seriously. I have become your fan, i mean completely. Before this its only 50%.50% to 100%??!! Wooww.. I'm really glad. :w00t:
But after reading this 8/10 shots. You win my heart completely :heart: :heart: :heart:
I shall make my font size big as to show my enthusiasmO-okay.... okay... Now, I know how big your enthusiasm. :inlove:
:shocked No... she's a girl. People in the restaurant mistook Takamina with a boy because she hide her hair in the cap.Oh! Sorry, my bad xD
I didn't want to mention it but...... Yuki will get her punishment later. :)Really?? Then, I can't wait :lol:
Black Marimokkori's dirtiness revealed. I can't believe she made a diary about the weaknesses of the girls she slept with. :lol:Like she said to Jurina... to improving the technique (?) :lol:
Mayu should be happy that she is the last but knowing that Yuki slept with lots of girls is something to get very angry with.That's my point too. :P
so much laughter and tears i get from this part, it's so freakin funny to know the way yuki make jurina shoot Rena, you know. and Yuki with her "so many" datemates....:rofl:
Hope an epic ending of this story, i'm sad to know this story will reach THE END SOON.Don't remind me about this.. I'm sad too.. :cry:
Ahh, there's a problem in Maeda's Team.. I hope they can solve it >_<:twothumbs
Just forgive each other XD
This mean there is only one chapter to go. :shockedYou can give me some ideas. :lol:
I just realized that now. :doh:
What I should do. :?
Noooo i want moreSeason 2? :lol:
Yuki is such a playgirl...She's strong... she can slept with those girls in 4 years. :lol:
284 girls....in 4 years
What's going to happen in the plan to kill the drug lord?I hope their plan will succeed.
Would they be able to take their revenge?
Honestly, I want to see Takamina be a real sergeant. I want to see her in action in arresting the killers Mariko.Don't worry, I'll do it. :)
Also I want Atsumina moment, Mayuki, Wmatsui, and Kojiyuu extended! :cry:I'll try to overwhelm the last chap with their moment... ;)
I support you 100% in forcing Putri to finish chapter 10 fast.hey... I'm waiting for your update too.
mayuki and wmatsui i dun wanna hear anything bad about them in the NEXT CHAPTER!!!
if something really happen to them, i will force you to make alternative ending!! or....something will BURN!! YEAH BURN!!
I need that book hahahaShould I write it? kidding. :lol:
This chapter contains of a character’s death.
me too :on cloudeye: I had that feeling when Tianne said Yuki will get her punishment but isn't too much :on hobo:
MAYUUUUUUUUUU :bleed eyes: I don't know why but I did knew that it will be Mayuki that will have a death when I read:QuoteThis chapter contains of a character’s death.
well.. Atsumina, Saeyaka, Kojiyuu are together...
But Wmatsui... seems to be a bit reluctant to even be together...
Jurina somewhat still angry for being betrayed like that...
Somehow... the death of Mayu could be avoided if Kojiharu could just kill him then
So somehow the death of Mayu could be indirectly caused by Jurina...
Eh.. Doctor Watanabe...? Interesting...
So Yuki is going to be with a male... that look like Mayu?
Eh... the end...
Please make a small sequel or extra about Mayuki after yuki was released from the mental hospital
Thank you for the update
:twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
I can't resist the urge to leave a comment anymoreeeee~ ヽ(`Д´)ノ I only have time to read stuffs at night so...you know...oh that painful moment when you have to hold in your overflowing feelings in order not to wake anyone up...(;´Д`)Ahh... I'm glad that you gave your first post to me. XD
you gave one of us here the permission to translate your fic right? Thank youuu~ they are screaming in delight (≧▽≦)yes, shechi-san often translate my fanfic. Thanks to him/her. :)
it's totally dramaaa... :cry:Drama? Is it too sad?
I want to kill you :yawn:Well... I guess I'm not that happy. *run away*
I don't know why but I did knew that it will be Mayuki that will have a death when I read:
This chapter contains of a character’s death.You have a 6th sense. :lol:
Who gave you the name?I already wrote his/her name in 'Thanks to' at Part 10. :P
It was sad and happy at the same time :nervousWow, Am I playing with your emotion? :lol:
When Mayu is mentioned I was really sad...It happened to me as well.
:on blackhole: an other writer killed Mayu... :frustrated:I had influenced by many fanfics. :lol:
I had that feeling when Tianne said Yuki will get her punishment but isn't too muchI think... yes, it's too much... but after the second thought.. 284 girls?! It's a great number. :P
it is great end for Yuki :)Thanks God, I didn't need to write another omake again for Yuki. 8)
even I feel a little hurt for Mayu *cry*
Rena~Rena~ Rena~ whew... WMatsui seems...fine? :3 huhuhu...Rena-stalker...eh?No.. Rena didn't mean to stalk Jurina, GPS help her. LOL
Bakamina!! Bakamidget!!! >x<!!Finally.... Takamina show herself as a sergeant in the last chap. XD
Can I request (read:demand) another MaYuki OS to make up for this? A new setting or a continuation between Doc Watanabe and Yuki, either is fine. Poor Mayu :err: first she got played by Yuki and in the end she didn't get a happy ending :cry:I already made it. I hope you like it, even if maybe it isn't like your expectation. :(
Can you make an omake on Yuki with Watanabe ?I already made it. Do you like it? :)
The smut is too short but I understand that you must be tired for making this very long chapter. :yep:Thanks for your understanding. ;)
How sweet of Rena to change her rude attitude just for Jurina. She can SMILE now! Good for Wmatsui. Loled at the GPS. Rena why are you so smart?Finally! There's someone who mentione about my lovely WMatsui.
Why did you have to kill Mayu? Like seriously... That was so heartbreaking to read. And with Yuki trying to kill herself just to meet Mayu again in the afterlife, it just adds up the depressed and sad feeling for the loss of the poor girl :(Wait a minute.... I even didn't know that you read my fanfic. :lol:
Great plot, great action, and really well done dialogue (I love the dialogue Yuki did when Mayu died in her arms, really realistic), you did another splendid job on a fanfic, Putri.You flattered me too much. :shocked: but.. thanks.
But do not understand why Mayu had to die .. she wanted to change her life or just get out from the police (?Sh-she..... is really dead. :cry:
Or you just wanted to troll us (? xD
But another 'Mayu' came so, what's there to fuss about? :lol:But... Mayu still dies. We still sad even if there's another 'Mayu' came. :P
Terima kasih :PIndonesian?
Hi. I one of those silent readersWait... what?! Another silent reader... I'm happy. :inlove:
I KNEW IT.It seems everyone have a good eye. They knew that Mayu is the one who I meant in 'Warning'.
I KNEW MAYU WOULD DIE!
at least Yuki is not THAT crazy like..talking to herself~ talking to the 'wall' haha :rofl:Talking to the.... wall? :shocked: I won't make my Yuki become so crazy like that. :P
I will be waiting for flashback of Maeda team~ :twothumbsI will write it as my last omake.
Kojiyuu in paris , dr. Watanabe , whooaa pls update asapYou will see KojiYuu later. :)
i don't know why but i feel sad ....If it's about Mayu.. all of us will feel sad, no matter how hard I try to make Yuki smile again. :cry:
Laugh really hard when i read the others commentH-how... can-you-laugh in the time like this?! :P
And wow just BIG WOW for the ending,i knew it but never though yuki as patient hahaThe doctor already did it. XD
Somehow its became a sexy ending,especialy when yuki meet dr.watanabe. I could feel the summer has come!!
Yuki really need a dr to healing her wound
The characters of the "main cast" are really different from other fics and it's kinda nice to have a different feel to it :)I hope it will be a refreshing story for us. Thank you.
I want AtsuRena...I... have no idea about this. :sweatdrop: Any idea?
I've read this story since the beginning, and i didn't comment yet. It's a great story, even though at last Mayu must died in this fic.I found another silent reader here. :inlove:
Great omake story. And it's success making me cried.Thank you. Which part that made you cried? :P
Is she really really dead? :cry:I wish you read my omake. XD
Why?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
What will be with Yuki now?
Why did she not wear bullet proof vest?Ahh... this question finally comes...
Also, if Yuki's punishment for being a player is mayu's death. I think it's a bit over the top.Haruna was ready to die, she even closed her eyes when Jurina pointed her gun onto her head.
I was kinda expecting haruna to die, you know the usual "I have avenged my lover's death, so now it's time to be with her" route haha
What a wonderful Omake storyI'm blushed. Totally.
Yuki finally back to her normal life without Mayu
You the best writer
WHY? WHY MAYU?? Oh my,no wonder yuki go crazy and want to suicide,yuki really do love someone this time and crazy in love too~It's the first time for her to deeply falling in love with someone, yet... she have to lose her love.
Maybe phisycal yuki is strong,but mentaly not strong enough,mayu is like everything for her...
Wmatsui quarrel was cute but somehow make rena wanna change too,I feel pity for Jurina, she always get a shout from Rena.
Its true,when we had someone act tsundere like rena,sometimes its a little bit tiring too,we want to be spoiled too,not just spoiling people
About atsumina,well those people like takamina character is rarely died on the story LOLSh-should I make one of them die in my next omake? :rofl:
Mayu?He is Mayu's sibling.
But the doctor appearance is looks like a guy from yuki POV
So i wonder if it just coincidence his last name was also watanabe
And i think how cool are you putri san,for making this hanging ending for yuki,its like i watch some movie LOLYeah.. you're right. Most of my readers asked me to make an omake. :P
And this kind of ending make the other want to know who that man and what happen next in yuki life~
Why Mayu always the one who is dead ???!!! :cry:My parent said: Good peopl... often die in their young age. :P
I finished this last night and was totally hooked up with it that the first thing I do in the morning was re-read the last chapter coz it's really incredible. haha I had goosebumps..T-twice?? It's a long chap. You spent a lot of time. :P
I've loved MaYuki!!! OMG... I so love how everything you've written in their story.. It's like I haven't seen a single flaw that will make me unlike that part of your story. It's amazing I've fallen in love with them because of this fic... /now I'm thinking whether to create a fanfic with them as well/Wow!! I'm really blushed when I read your comment.
Also, WMatsui.. ahh made me love them as well!
OMG my comment is so long now.. lol time to end this.. XDDon't worry... Honestly, I love long comments. :w00t:
More omake, onegaishimass :bow:Please wait my second omake, okay? :)
wmatsui will be great
Though somehow... Dating your sibling's lover is a bit...I didn't know how to respond about this.
I don't know... Isn't there a silent rule that saying you should not take your sibling's lover
You can protect them, love them but never cross the line
You know, OS for they both would be great, hhahahh but thank you for the omake,Umm... I'm not good enough in picturing a male character, it's a bit hard for me.
Lol, Watanabe-bro is 285...I know... it's such a great number. :lol:
love this this update atleast yuki is not alone :wub:Thank you..
Mayu, gone but not forgotten... ohhh I get teary reading this omake~~ :'(I feel it too.
I can totally feels Mayuki loves..
Hi :cow:
Omake's very good~ Althought having dr.watanabe char, Mayuki still show their love. I love it :deco: I again cry for your Fic :panic:
Demo, Let me think to the another way. Dr.watanebe's appearance is a pain punishment more than Mayu's death. He look like Mayu but dr.watanabe is dr.watanabe is not Mayu. By the way, If I was Yuki, I would feel hurt. :catglare: Maybe I'm still thinking about Mayu's death. Sorry for my mess comment :sweatdrop:
Good job! :hip smile: Putri-san, right?
@KwoMinAh: Hello baby :cathappy:
Dr.watanebe's appearance is a pain punishment more than Mayu's death. He look like Mayu but dr.watanabe is dr.watanabe is not Mayu. By the way, If I was Yuki, I would feel hurt. :catglare: Maybe I'm still thinking about Mayu's death.This. I thought about it too... I even wrote some paragraph about it..
Talking about Mayu's death. I LOVE IT SO MUCH.Wow.. This is the first comment that say something like this. :lol:
Such a classic death scene, i can feel like it's happening in real life. It's in a blink of second and from Mayu being healthy becomes dead instantly. Even though not immediately but still, she's 100% going to die for sure. I got chills down my spine a little when reading the death scene~I didn't expect that the scene can feels so real like in your description.
I was also surprised that Jurina got shot XD I thought she would be dying as well. GLAD SHE DIDN'T!In MaYuki case: The 'new Mayu' is her danso version... The Doctor.
YUKIRIN IS MY KAMI-OSHI~! So...I hope she's happy with her doctor~ At least Dr. Watanabe would make sure he will make Yuki happy~They will... happily ever after. :P
ITS SO CUTE THAT RENA KISSED YUKI'S CHEEKS!! AW! I sense YukiRena... OwOYes, I think Rena changed too much. It's weird... actually. :lol:
Please make another omake.I will make it. :)
oh god, i love your writing more and more and more.
But,,can u pLease make WMATSUI OMAKE ????????? Onegaishimaasu. .I will make it, but... it won't like MaYuki omake.
Dr. Watanabe is so perfect! Caring, kind, smart, good chef, and handsome.I wanna become his wife. :lol:
Yuki falls in love with a guy, it's her turn to be protected by those strong warm arms.Back then... she always became the one who will protecting her lovers, but now.... when it comes to a guy, she can't act like that again.
I still can't believe how much Rena changed. :nervous She has really started to become intimate(?) to other people.:lol: She changed too much.. Jurina must 'fix' her soon. :P
I don't want to impose you but I want another Dr. WatanabexYuki omake. :lol:I can't make it as an omake anymore.. but as a sub-omake(?) in my next omake with other pairings.
NOOOOOO~ :banghead: It's my baby MAYUYU~! :bleed eyes: WHY?!! OH?! WHY?!I'm sorry... hey, stop crushing your head. :P
Saying goodbye to Yuki and was not able to finish the "i love you" it seriously broke my heart.. :banghead:
When i was on Yuki's part she's at the hospital, i felt sad for her.. She was devastated when Mayu died on her arms and still misses her alot..No, it can't be Mayu's reincarnation... I mean... she just died in 3 years and her reincarnation already become a doctor?! :P
Then there was a doctor who came and describe like Mayu then helped Yuki.. I thought at first he was Mayu's reincarnation..
Should I make another omake again? XD
"So why exactly are you in my house, Acchan?" the taller, raven-haired girl looked at the slightly shorter and older girl in front of her who was lying on the bed, looking at some fashion magazine.
"Well, I don't really have many places to go to. Besides, you know I'm irresistible, Rena-chan~" the shorter girl joked as she gave the taller one a wink.
Rena sighed as she sat down next to the shorter girl. She couldn't deny it. She had a certain fondness for Acchan ever since she took her in, much to a certain puppy-like girl's dismay.
"Fine, but we're splitting up the rent." Rena said as she lied down, next to Acchan who was still engrossed in the magazine.
"Deal. Just as long as you and your girlfriend keep your voices down."
"S- She's not my girlfriend!" Rena blushed furiously and smacked the shorter girl right in the head.
"Ouch!" Acchan grimaced in pain as she was hit by the older one. "Come on, everyone knows about you two already, you lolicon!"
"Urg..." Rena couldn't talk back to the older girl since she was right. "Fine... I'll try not to do it much..."
"Huh? Do 'what' much?" Acchan asked, her face faked-confused.
"Y- You know... What you were saying earlier.. B- Besides, I'm not really an addict for it..." Rena's blush turned a lot redder than usual.
"What 'are' you talking about, Rena-chan~? I didn't mention anything specific, did I~?"
"Ah." Rena came back to reality, which was looking at the older girl who has a teasing grin on her face. "N- No I didn't mean-"
"Ne~ What did you mean by that~?" Acchan crept closer to her, her hands grabbing Rena's arm and her legs intertwining themselves with Rena's in an attempt to limit the chances of the younger girl's escape.
"N- N- No, t- that was just-"
"Tell me, Rena-chan~"
"NOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!"