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Re: Koi: Chapter Four-Seven (update May 15)
« Reply #20 on: May 16, 2008, 08:20:51 AM »
Woah Yossie did the unthinkable! OMG Miki!  :cry:
Grr.. Aya. now she realises.. omg..   :angry:and when she finds out what happened to Miki..  :banghead:

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Re: Koi: Chapter Four-Seven (update May 15)
« Reply #21 on: May 19, 2008, 03:36:43 PM »
Why? WHy would you do that to poor Miki? She has been through so much already! And why couldn't Yoshi be soft with her? Bully!  Thinking of Yoshi, I kept listening to I hate everything about you and it totally went with the story.

 Boy I actually cried for poor Miki  :cry: And Aya FINALLY deciding to be with her and put behind her selfish stubborn fears does not make up for any of it! She was supposed to be her friend! She was suppposed to be by her side, help her, protect her, cry with her and such but she left her there to die! All alone! And she knew! She knew that there was no one else there for her! She knew she had no other friends or anyone to lean on! She must've caught a glimpse of how Yoshi was looking at her! She must've known... How could she not? She has to! She is Aya!

  She should know all there is to know about Miki.. In fact I think she does. So knowing all she did, how could she stand by and just watch these things happen? Not only that, but she was the catalyst as well as the producer of the problem.

  Not only did she stand by and watch her get lower and lower, but she stepped in and instead of picking her up, she broke her. She threw her away after using her for her own selfish ideas and wants but she gave nothing in return. Out of a whim she stole her and broke her and you just let it happen!  :cry:

  And Miki! Poor poor Miki... She was soo resigned! She was so totally in love and deeply troubled by her afflictions that she did not notice someone who was so close to her was trying to get her attention. She couldn't decode the meaning of those glances towards her and she didn't pay attention to the world around her. She was so unfortunate to have her everything taken away from her and then just like that, the thing she had been saving for Aya was taken away from her too.

  She must feel just so alone, small, lonely, afraid, dirty, ashamed, bertrayed and god knows what else. She is going through so much pain right now. It is one hit after the other after the other.

   And what will be achieved when Aya apologises? Will they be a normal happy couple? Will Miki even get over this? All of it? Will she even be alive to hear to make amends. I think she is about to kill herself. She seems like she is going to sink just a little lower before Aya gets to her.... and by then it will be too late. I fear.... some kind of horrible thing will happen soon. I don't know what..... But something inside tells me that something big is coming.. Something big and bad.

  And what the hell is she gonna say? "Hi, sorry I've been a total bitch lately and I haven't been by your side when you needed me the most, but guess what! I love you too! And I was a bit scared of change so I procrastinated and fucked up your life for about a month only to realise what a huge idiot I was and I am sorry....... for everything. But now I am ready! Lets be together! In a lesbian way!" If I was Miki I would slap her soo hard she'd be seeing stars for a year..

  But Miki.... Miki.. she is too kind. I know she will eventually forgive Aya. Not Yoshi, but definately Aya. She will say sorry she will accept her apologies and la dee dah, they are together....

   But aren't we forgetting something? That's right, she was raped...... And some huge speech where tells her that and she probably apologises or something. Unless she finds her in the shower going over her mantra of "Dirty....... dirty.......... so dirty" and there is a crying bit and then she's like "Yoshizawa....... she........ she........... she raped me" in a tiny whisper.....

 I can see it now....... Or if thats not  the case she catches her getting molested by Yoshi again and she either grows a pair and helps her or she stands by and watch then realise what is happening or she watches gets the wrong idea and goes away thinking they are together.  Either way this'll either have a tragic ending where at least one of the main characters dies or it will have a sweet sappy ending like we all want to be yet is soo unreachable.

  I hope for the latter of course but am not very optimistic at this very moment. I mean let's face it, it's not like Miki has had any luck at all lately and I don't think anyone is gonna drop a tonne weighing anvil on Yoshi so there is that problem, there is also the fact that it is not certain she will even make it alive and right now it seems like she wont and of course who says she will forgive Aya? 

  Sure in the start she claims she would always forgive her for anything but times and people change and she has been through soo much already that a normal person would have been in their bed, in the fetal position crying right now if they were her. And quite frankly, it is what I am about to go do so I really wont blame her if she dumps Aya.

  I mean, the one porrible characteur that she could've been with is such an asshole and the other one that she really loves has done all this to her, I wont blame her if she doesn't ever want to see anyone again... I'm sorry Mikitty, they broke you... Well, I loved the story and am dying to read more because I have to know what happens in the end so I hope you continue this fic, and I hope even though I doubt it that the end will be good to my broken angel.
« Last Edit: May 20, 2008, 05:20:32 AM by sweeety »
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Re: Koi: Chapter Four-Seven (update May 15)
« Reply #22 on: May 19, 2008, 06:25:09 PM »
^damn that was a looooonnnnngggg comment

"Hi, sorry I've been a total bitch lately and I haven't been by your side when you needed me the most, but guess what! I love you too! And I was a bit scared of change so I procrastinated and fucked up your life for about a month only to realise what a huge idiot I was and I am sorry....... for everything. But now I am ready! Lets be together! In a lesbian way!" If I was Miki I would slap her soo hard she'd be seeing stars for a year..

Scene:
Miki opens door  :mon POd: to find a extra cutsey and perky ayaya  :gmon twirl: saying "HI Tan  :gmon bye: i love u  :gmon love: and was scared so i dissed you repeatedly  :gmon tears: because i couldn't handle liking a girl  :gmon shy: ... teehee :gmon hot:"

Miki:  :mon mad: :mon evil: :knee: :kickass: "get *bleep* outta here"
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Re: Koi: Chapter Four-Seven (update May 15)
« Reply #23 on: May 20, 2008, 05:27:37 AM »
fixed it. Only just saw my post came as a biiiig slab of words, sorry, please don't kill me.

 Yeah, I don't ssee them getting togetther that easilly....

 Hmm, just had a funny thought...

 Aya walks into Miki's apartment, sees her crying on her bed, goes over to her...... and rapes her too!! XD Poor Miki, getting raped left right and centre... XD

 I don't see Yoshi letting go of her that easilly though. Even IF (and that is a big IF) she forgives Aya and wants to be with her there is still the psycho Yoshi she has to get over. But then again maybe she is over her and just wont care anymore. Hmm then the whole Friday thing can be said to have been to get away from Yoshi...

 GJ, I am dying to know what happens next.

 Oh, and those monkeys are sooo cute!!! Are you sure monkey Miki would kill her? lol
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Re: Koi: Chapter Four-Seven (update May 15)
« Reply #24 on: May 20, 2008, 06:29:25 AM »
hell yeah monkey miki would kill monkey aya because real miki is too nice and is probably going to get hurt and hurt again and again because of it.... im thinking this is going to have a tragic ending with miki committing suicide i mean shes already broken i doubt aya can fix this because right now i have no faith in her character and yossie... well yossie is scary as hell  :mon headbang: and probably not going to give her up without a fight... unless you know she done with her now that she got what she wanted and is just going to continue being an asshole... though i have a question as to where the heck is rika :? i mean i just reread this and she was mentioned earlier but since she with yossie that means...
 a) shes her sex slave  :mon hanky: b) shes worse!!  :gmon pissed:
....back to miki i hope she gets her happily ever after but im a tad pessimistic on it
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Re: Koi: Chapter Four-Seven (update May 15)
« Reply #25 on: May 20, 2008, 06:57:49 AM »
same.

about Rika though, I think she was just Yoshi's friend, and didn't know anything about anything.
Sure they were hanging out and she invited Miki adn Aya out but I think maybe she just thought Yoshi liked her and wanted to hook them up, I don't think she knew what happened or anything.

 Why did Miki pull back though? It's not like she could have been with Aya at the moment. I think it would have been better if she had kissed Yoshi back initialy, then she wouldn't be in this mess... Poor Mikitan :'(
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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilouge (update July 9)
« Reply #26 on: July 10, 2008, 09:41:48 AM »
Okay it's been a while but it's finally finished. I've had massive writers block that I really never got over but in the end I just forced myself to write whether I wanted to or not cause I figured it was time for this story to end. So here it is past 3:30 in the morning but Koi has finally come to an end. Not quite how I planned it, but it's an end none the less. So onto the story!


Chapter Eight

Aya stood in front of Miki’s apartment and contemplated whether she should knock or just open the door herself with her key. It would be more polite to knock since technically we’re not speaking right now but if I knock she may not open the door. Coming to her decision Aya unlocked the door and entered Miki’s apartment.

Looking around Aya could not spot Miki. She began searching the apartment afraid that all her psyching herself had gone to waste and Miki wasn’t even home. Just as she was about to leave Aya realized that she could hear the shower running. Realizing that Miki was taking a shower Aya decided to wait until she finished and then tell her how she felt. Aya sat on the couch and waited going over in her mind what she was going to say. After about fifteen minutes Aya drifted off to sleep.



Aya woke up confused and then cursed herself. Aya you idiot now is not the time to be sleeping! Miki probably came out of the shower saw you and left. Now you’ve ruined your opportunity. Aya was about ready to bang her head against the back of the sofa when she realized she could still hear the shower running.

Wait a minute how long have I been asleep. She checked her phone and saw that she had been sleeping for just over an hour. Wait there’s no way Miki is still in the shower. She was already in there when I came and I sat there for at least ten, fifteen minutes before I fell asleep. Miki doesn’t take showers that long! What’s going on?

Worried Aya got up and slowly made her way to the bathroom. Placing her ear against the door she verified that it really was the sound of the shower she was hearing. Now, confused and worried she carefully opened the door to see what was going on.

“Miki! Miki are you in here? You’ve been showering for a long time.” Aya looked around the bathroom and into the shower perplexed at the sight which greeted her. She saw the shower, she saw the shower running, but she didn’t see Miki in the shower. Wondering if Miki had just accidently left the shower on and left the house Aya went closer to the shower to turn it off. When Aya reached over to turn the shower off she saw a sight that both shocked and scared her.

There in the corner of the shower was Miki, sitting on the floor with her knees pulled up to her chest and her arms wrapped around them, slightly rocking back and forth as if to comfort herself. She was sitting directly in the stream of the water which, as Aya could feel, had long turned cold.

“Miki!” Aya quickly turned off the cold water and knelt down beside Miki. She noticed that when the water stopped Miki seemed to begin to mumble to herself she bent down until her ear was by Miki’s mouth so she could hear what she was saying.

“No, so dirty. Gotta get clean. Can never get clean. Gotta get clean. So so dirty.”

Aya looked at Miki in confusion trying to figure out what she was talking about but noticed that Miki seemed to be in a kind of trance.

“Miki! Miki! Snap out of it! You’re not dirty. You’re very clean and you need to get out of the shower before you get sick.” Aya pulled a large fluffy towel off the towel rack and placed it around Miki in an attempt to dry her off and keep her warm. When Miki felt the towel touch her skin she seemed to snap out of her trance and looked around the bathroom as if seeing it for the first time. Her eyes roamed the room before they landed on Aya which made her flinch and shrink a little into herself.

“Why are you here Aya? You hate me remember? And I’m dirty. You don’t want to get dirty, you’re so clean. You shouldn’t be here. I’m not good enough for you.” Miki looked down at her hands refusing to meet Aya’s gaze.

Aya reached out and grasped Miki’s chin, raising it and forcing Miki to look into Aya’s eyes. “I don’t hate you Miki. And you’re not dirty. Come on Miki let’s get you out of this shower and dry so that we can talk.”

With that Aya was able to maneuver Miki out of the shower and into her bedroom where she managed to get her dressed in a warm pair of fluffy pajamas since Aya noticed her shivering. Aya grabbed a blanket off of Miki’s bed and then led Miki into the living room to sit on the couch. When Miki was seated Aya wrapped the blanket around her and then sat on the couch beside Miki. Miki once again pulled her knees up to her chest and wrapped her arms around them. She looked at Aya before quickly lowering her gaze and burying her face in her arms.

Aya looked at Miki in confusion and worry. She knew that something else must have happened to Miki because she was sure Miki wouldn’t just be acting like this because of their fight. She was determined to get to the bottom of it and fix whatever was wrong with Miki.

“Miki what’s wrong?” Aya placed her arm on Miki’s shoulder but Miki flinched away from her touch. “Come on Miki you have to tell me what the problem is. You know you can tell me anything.”

Miki slowly looked up and looked at Aya. The pain that Aya saw in Miki’s eyes astonished her greatly. I’ve never seen Miki so… so… broken before. I can see so many emotions in her eyes right now. What could have possibly happened to Miki during this week that has hurt her so deeply? Why was I so stupid to stop talking to her or I could have been there for her. I could have helped her through… through… maybe I should find out what happened first.

“Miki what happened?” Aya used the kindest, softest, most caring voice she could muster, trying to coax Miki into opening up.

Miki stared hard into Aya’s big expressive eyes and found her own eyes tearing up. Suddenly Miki grabbed on to Aya’s arm in desperation.  “I didn’t want to do it Aya! I promise I didn’t! She… she did things, she made me do things, but… but I didn’t want it.” Miki’s eyes pleaded with Aya to believe her but Aya was confused as to what Miki was talking about.

“Miki you didn’t want to do what? Who made you do things Miki?” Aya grabbed Miki’s shoulders and turned her so that she was facing Aya straight on. “Miki what happened?”  Aya stared at Miki trying to will her to tell her the whole story. She noticed a single tear fall down Miki’s cheek as Miki lowered her gaze to the floor. “What happened Miki!?” Aya yelled at Miki and shook her now really afraid of what Miki had to say.

“She raped me ok!” Miki yelled back at Aya once again lifting her head to look at Aya. “Yossie raped me.” This time when Miki spoke her voice was soft and broke halfway through.  Miki fell against the back of the couch and broke out in sobs. Admitting what had happened to Aya made the situation seem so much more real to her.

Aya sat motionless on the couch trying to process what Miki had just told her. After a few seconds the words finally sunk in and Aya couldn’t believe it. What the hell! Yoshizawa raped, RAPED Miki. My Miki. NO one touches MY Miki. She will pay! I can’t even believe that Yoshizawa would do something like that. And to Miki! Poor Miki. How she must be feeling right now. What a second… Miki!

Aya snapped out of her daze remembering that Miki was sitting with her on the couch. Aya looked over and saw that Miki was slumped against the back of the couch sobbing so hard that she was hyperventilating a little and kept coughing. Aya realized that Miki would soon make herself sick like that and gathered Miki in her arms.

“Shh Miki. I’m here now. I will never ever let ANYBODY hurt you ever again.” Aya lifted Miki up onto her lap and gently rocked her. The two sat like that for an hour. Miki had stopped crying at some point but Aya continued to rock and comfort her.

After an hour Miki suddenly thought about the situation and pulled away from Aya as far as she could, which was hardly anywhere with the tight hold Aya had on her.  Aya noticed the change and looked at Miki, confused. “What’s the matter Miki?”

“Aren’t you mad at me Aya?” Miki stared at Aya with question in her eyes. “Why are you here?”

Aya sighed. It was time to tell Miki the things she had been practicing to say. Wait a second I didn’t practice anything to say. Why didn’t I practice anything to say? I have to get this perfect. I don’t have another chance. Really I don’t deserve this chance after all the things I’ve put Miki through. Of well I guess I’ll just have to say the first things I think of.

Aya gently placed Miki back on the couch then took Miki’s hand. “Miki, there’s something I have to confess to you.” Aya paused, took a deep breath, then gazed directly into Miki’s eyes trying to convey all of her emotions. “First off you should know that Keita and I have broken up. I dumped him right after I… well right after I kicked you out of my apartment. If you wondering why I broke up with him first of all it’s because he said all those mean things to you. You didn’t deserve that and none of the things he said were true. They were all stupid and childish and you never should have been subjected to his stupidity.”

Aya paused in her speech to see how Miki was reacting. Miki just stared at Aya in shock and wonder. She’s probably wondering where all of this is coming from since I did allow him to abuse her for a month. “The other reason why I broke up with him is because, truthfully, I never liked him in the first place.” Aya had a slight gasp from Miki but chose to ignore it in favor of continuing. “Me dating him was stupid and I see that now. I only dated him because I was confused and stupid and I thought it would solve all my problems but it didn’t it only made more and it made me feel worse and it hurt you so I was miserable and you were miserable and nothing was right and…” Aya realized she had started to rant so she took another deep breath and resumed her speech at a more normal pace.

“Miki when you told me you loved me I was scared. I knew that I felt something for you but I just brushed it off as a phase. But when you admitted your love for me I realized that that was exactly what I felt for you. Love. And I was so terrified cause it was so strong it felt like it would suffocate me. So I thought maybe I was just lonely. Maybe I was confusing love with the longing to be with someone. So I dated Keita. But Miki that was dumb because I realized that it wasn’t longing and it was love. A love stronger than I could ever imagine. And I know I don’t deserve you because I’ve hurt you so much but I just can’t keep this inside anymore.”

Aya stared at Miki and in return Miki stared back. Miki was still looking at Aya in wonder, afraid that she was imagining everything. Aya gently took Miki’s face in her hands. “Miki I love you.” Aya slowly brought Miki’s face towards her own and then gently kissed Miki on the lips. Aya made sure to make the kiss soft and brief so not to remind Miki of her recent experience. She wasn’t trying to force Miki into anything she just wanted to break Miki out of her daze and convey her love.

Miki blinked out of her daze as if just realizing what was going on. Her eyes widened when she realized what Aya had just done and she unconsciously brought her hand up to touch her lips.

“Aya are you serious?” Miki’s expression seemed to beg Aya to tell her it was the truth and that she was not dreaming.

Aya ran her hand through Miki’s hair and gazed at her with pure love. “Of course I’m serious Miki. I love you so much and I’m so sorry for hurting you.”

For the second time that night Miki began to cry but this time it was out of happiness that Aya actually loved her too. Aya once again gathered Miki into her arms and repeatedly reassured her of her love. And for the rest of the night the two stayed in that position talking and healing the scars left between them and moving on to their bright future together.


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Two days later Miki and Aya walked into Hello! Project’s main studio ready to begin their days at work. They had spent the previous two days (which they both surprisingly had off) talking about their new relationship and getting back on great terms with each other.

The two entered the lobby holding hands, smiling and laughing. Many of the Hello! Project members were hanging out in the lobby and were delighted to see the two happy and talking again after witnessing the depression from the week before.

Suddenly Aya noticed that Miki had stopped laughing. Aya turned to Miki and noticed that she had an expression of pure terror on her face. Concerned Aya followed Miki’s gaze to see what could have scared her so badly. And then she saw it. There she was across the room talking to Rika. Yoshizawa Hitomi. Before Aya realized what she was doing she dropped Miki’s hand and began to stalk across the lobby towards Yossie.

Miki grabbed at Aya’s hand trying to pull her back. “No Aya don’t go over there.” Miki pleaded but it was no use. Aya was determined. Miki followed quickly behind Aya pleading with her the whole way.

Around the lobby the h!p members were beginning to whisper to each other wondering why Aya looked so angry and Miki looked so scared. Being the nosy people they were they began to watch to see what was going on.

Aya reached Rika and Yossie and stopped walking. Miki pulled on her arm and pleaded with her some more but Aya continued to ignore her.

“Hey Miki hey Aya!” Rika cheerfully greeted the two completely oblivious to the tension in the air. Both Aya and Miki ignored her and stared at Yossie, Aya in hatred and Miki in fear. Yossie smirked at Miki and then greeted the two. “Yeah hi Matsuura, Fujimoto.”

Miki shivered and dropped her head when Yossie addressed her. Seeing Miki’s reaction only pissed Aya off even more. She walked even closer to Yossie till there was hardly any space between the two of them. By now the whole lobby was watching trying to figure out what was going on.

Yossie turned her smirk off of Miki and onto Aya instead. “Problem Matsuura?” Before anyone realized what was happening Aya brought her arm back and then slapped Yossie hard across the face. The whole room fell silent surprised that AYA of all people had just slapped YOSSIE.

Yossie looked down at the floor to try and control her anger then slowly raised her head again glaring at Aya. Yossie opened her mouth to say something but before she had the chance Aya slapped her again even harder than before, snapping Yossie’s head hard to the side.

Yossie slowly brought her head back around to face Aya and wiped the blood off of her lip. She glanced behind Aya and glared at Miki who was half-hiding behind her.  Aya noticed Yossie’s gaze and narrowed her eyes and grabbed the front of Yossie’s shirt. “Don’t you ever EVER touch Miki again. Don’t even freaking look at her.”

Aya turned around and saw Miki shaking behind her, fear still clearly in her eyes. Seeing Miki’s fear pissed Aya off again so she turned back around to face Yossie once again. She gave Yossie a quick once over then spat on her face. She watched as Yossie wiped the spit off in disgust then she turned back to face Miki once more.

Aya took the trembling girls hand in her own and spoke softly to her. “Come on Miki, we’re skipping work today.” With that Aya gently pulled Miki out of the room leaving everyone behind to stare after them in awe.











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Re: Koi: Chapter Four-Seven (update May 15)
« Reply #27 on: July 10, 2008, 09:44:09 AM »
And here's the epilogue.

Epilogue

Months had passed and things were finally starting to become normal once again. Miki hadn’t wanted to tell anyone about the rape so Aya had reluctantly agreed to keep it a secret. Of course, this meant that everyone ended up knowing exactly what happened. In truth it was Yossie’s fault that the secret got out. Rika had asked her one day why Miki always seemed afraid around her and Yossie proudly bragged about how she had “put the bitch in her place.” Disgusted Rika quickly went to management and told them what Yossie had done. After that the story somehow leaked out even further till the whole project knew.

Yossie had obviously been kicked out of the project though the public was told that she left on her free will to further her studies. Instead of being sent directly to jail Yossie was sent to counseling to see if it could help her. Apparently being an idol helped her from immediately getting the punishment she deserved.

With Yossie’s leave Miki became the leader of Morning Musume with Ai as her sub leader. Being leader had greatly improved her self-esteem since the girls loved her as she was a much fairer leader than Yossie had been. The girls, knowing what Miki had been through tried not to give her a hard time and generally just went along with the things Miki told them to do. In return Miki lost some of her temper and gained patience for when the girls were having trouble learning things. Ai was also a big help, being a very mature sub leader and knowing when to take over. Miki’s smile quickly returned and Morning Musume was blossoming well under her care.

Between Miki and Aya things were wonderful. Miki had quickly forgiven Aya of the things that had happened when she was with Keita even though Aya still thought that she didn’t deserve Miki’s forgiveness. Miki loved being with Aya and Aya loved being with Miki. They took their relationship one day at a time and each day seemed to get even better.

Though things were going great between the two everything wasn’t perfect. Apparently the time when Aya was dating Keita affected Miki more than she cared to admit. Her self-esteem was still pretty low in regards to Aya so she often took things Aya said as jokes seriously. Aya learned to quickly tell Miki that things were jokes so that Miki wouldn’t listen to her seriously. Aya considered if she should stop joking on Miki but she didn’t want to placate Miki she wanted to help her heal and she realized she couldn’t do that if she babied her.

Intimacy was another problem. Miki was obviously deeply affected from what Yossie did to her and would meet Aya’s acts of intimacy with fear. The fear with vanish once Aya reassured her that she was not Yossie and that she would never hurt her but the initial fear would always come.

Despite all this though Miki and Aya were truly happy. Happier than they could ever remember being in their lives. Because despite everything they’d been through in the end they fought. And they survived. Together.

The end.





Thanks for reading everyone!

Oh and I just thought I should clarify that I absolutely love Yossie and I don't think she'd ever do anything like this but she seemed like the most realistic person to be able to control Miki like this.

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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #28 on: July 10, 2008, 09:55:12 AM »
Just want to put this out there that I only just read everyone's comments now because I was too nervous to read them before but when I read:
But aren't we forgetting something? That's right, she was raped...... And some huge speech where tells her that and she probably apologises or something. Unless she finds her in the shower going over her mantra of "Dirty....... dirty.......... so dirty" and there is a crying bit and then she's like "Yoshizawa....... she........ she........... she raped me" in a tiny whisper.....

I was like sweeety read my mind. And I agree with everyone that I let Aya off too easy but like I said I couldn't think of what to write so end the end i just decided to end it.

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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #29 on: July 10, 2008, 10:20:18 AM »
this fic is the second fic i've read with yossui raping someone... strange for me to say this but... EFFECTIVE!

... man... i read the whole thing just now... and i have to say... awesome... (that's my favorite word now)

... that was a good fic!

Thanks for sharing that with us and i hope you keep on writing!

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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #30 on: July 10, 2008, 10:22:48 AM »
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 GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SOOO HAPPY RIGHT NOW!!!!!!!!!!! AND WAIT TILL I ACTUALLY READ IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #31 on: July 10, 2008, 11:20:55 AM »
I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! And I think Yoshi should go to an insane asylum, not jail. But I like how they were happy together. I loved the ending and that you didn't forget that Miki was in fact raped and would need to get over that in the end and you added that, instead of just going with the rainbow and butterfly ending of "They all lived happilly ever after". And I also like that everyone got their just deserts in the end. And how Rika was more noble and gallant than she is in some other fics. I like this protector of the wronged Rika :) I loooooved it! It is actually one of my fave stories and I am so glad you finally finished it because I was actually dreaming about it the other night :) And I dreamt of a gazillion diferent ending but mine were wimpy and sappy and stuff you know? but I like yours better :) thank you for writing this:) Also I hope I didn't seem mean or insulting with my previews messages, I didn't mean to make fun I was just really emo and angry at Yoshi so I was taking it out on the messages.. sorry, hope you can forgive me :3
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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #32 on: July 10, 2008, 12:05:29 PM »
GAH!!! I'm glad you finished it~ I really enjoyed reading this because it's a great fic and I love GAM to death. I agree with sweety how you made it realistic and didn't have the happily ever after. I should've replied faster ....... sweety practically said everything I wanted to~  :lol:

I loved how Aya went all Sukeban Deka on Yossie :mon mischief: and I can press "ctrl + D" now that it's finally finished~  :mon fyeah:  :mon love:
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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #33 on: July 10, 2008, 12:59:22 PM »
btw... I forgot what I was gunna say.... oh yeah...

 Another persons brain read by yors truly! I'm on a roll! I like reading peoples' brains! It's fun! I enjoyed reading yours -*scrolls up and looks at writers name* - CrypticShadow8! It was fun!

 Funny thing that happened. I was listening to "Defying Gravity cause I love that musical it's my fave and I'm crazy for this song rite now, and long story short, there was that bit in the story and it's the last line I think and it goes "They survived. TOGETHER!" and it just so happened that when I was reading that bit, Idina Menzel's "Together!" was uttered XD so yeah, fun moment there XD

 I love this song!

 I hope you're happy now~ :3
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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #34 on: July 11, 2008, 04:19:26 AM »
Good for Rika for having the sense to go to management to inform them of what had happened. If she hadn't, who knows how many other girls this might have happened to.
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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #35 on: July 11, 2008, 07:50:32 PM »
I was still kinda upset at Aya but she definitely redeemed her self when she got all gangsta on Yossi :mon evil: I was like HA! sucka! and props to Rika for informing management :otomerika: .... I haven't seen a caring and mature Rika before in these fanfics so that was a nice surprise... I definitely enjoy this I hope you continue to write more stories 
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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #36 on: August 03, 2008, 04:13:37 PM »
im actually kinda glad you let Aya off so easily cause Miki needed her there. If she was too proud to forgive her which she wouldn't have been as she was low and broken, but if she was and if she hadn't forgiven her I don't want to know what she would have done on her own.....  I fear she would have died. :'(
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Re: Koi: Chapter Eight and Epilogue (update July 9)
« Reply #37 on: August 03, 2008, 04:58:16 PM »
I was wondering what happened to this story, and now I'm wondering how I missed the update!
Whoa, scared Miki is something I find very difficult to picture. But I'm glad Aya got justice for her. And that little by little, she can help Miki get back to normal.
Great story! :heart:

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