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« Reply #120 on: September 03, 2006, 08:47:45 AM »
I can't believe I missed Chap. 21 :evil:

But I'm done reading it too :)

Now for Chap. 22:

[Ai] + [removing/remove/take off] + [any piece of clothing]

Put the following words in the same sentence (though this happens everytime in the "other fanfic section") and you've got a very hot, interesting and "I have to read it again" chapter. :) :drool:

20 minutes only? I bet the girls will be willing to continue where they left off in their respective rooms/places. :P

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Keep it up! :thumbsup

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« Reply #121 on: September 03, 2006, 12:39:51 PM »
I just read through all of this. If you included KameReina that would pretty much be all of my couples right there. Haha. Awesome. TakaReinaGaki is hot beyond words. Looking forward to more.

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« Reply #122 on: September 05, 2006, 08:46:37 AM »
DAMMIT! I am hella impatiently! :pen_explode:
WAITING for your next post! :panda_omg:

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« Reply #123 on: September 05, 2006, 03:29:43 PM »
so...what should i say that wasnt said...it's hard !

first, i'm happy.
at first when i read your first chapter i didn't get anything lol...sorry, it's not your fault, i just missed the h!m you are refering to.
So to understand a little more, i kept on reading....and reading...and reading...i think i have spent 1hour on your fanfic lol...and i have to say i love it ! no wonder why guys here are so impatient.
the way you describe the girls so match them ! like when i read the chapter 12, i thought "wow so true" lol and the way you wrote it was so funny.By far the chapter i like the most.

and that..."Sayumi pointed to a page of her script where a paragraph was highlighted in pink. While Eri stood beside her beaming like the proudest boyfriend."
XD XD XD

i espacialy love to read your love-triangle , so it's sure we can have some crispy unexpected and interesting moment ! such as chapter 18, and the end of it.
"At the final flight of steps, Reina was surprised to see the figure of someone waiting for her at the top.

“What do you want?”

“What are you talking about?”

Reina replied the question with a straight face. She already knew the answer to that matter but thought it better to play dumb.

“Don’t act innocent with me Reina. What do you want with Gaki? In case you hadn’t noticed, she’s mine.”"

that made me laugh so hard...

and of course what happen next in the chatper 19.
the other good thing of reading your story, is that we can clearly imagine how they are when you describe them...
"“Did anyone ever tell you how hawt you are when you get aggressive?”"
awsome lol..i so imagine the two of them here hahaha and what an unexpected sentence for reina but that so fits her...

for the last chapter i didnt get it at first lol so i read it once more...so looks like it's going to get nasty there XD

sorry i wrote a long comment, and said what other have already said, but i just wanted to say good job and keep it up !

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« Reply #124 on: September 06, 2006, 06:45:40 AM »
Chapter 23


Giving in to Ai’s advances, Risa pulled haphazardly at her own coat, trying to remove it quickly without breaking her very pleasurable kiss with Ai.

“Let me!”

Reina lunged at Risa and tore at her clothes with so much vigor that the other two were stunned for a moment.

“What?! We’ve only got 20 minutes.”

Reina stated as a matter-of-factly.

"Wait! Reina's joining in?"

Risa pulled at Reina's arms which were halted in their process and the yankee wasn't afraid to show her unhappiness. Reina wasn't a happy camper when it came to such interuptions.

"Of course I am. Right Ai-chan?"

The sly smile on Reina's face told Risa all she needed to know.

"Okay... so since I've been kept out of the loop so long, this better be good."

"Oh it will be. I promise. And I'm sure Ai-chan will be glad to help me."

The only sounds emerging from the carriage hanging in the sky after that weren’t coherent at all.

A line was already forming at the base of the Ferris wheel waiting for the ride to start up once more. The operator grinned and patted his trouser pocket lightly, happy to be 10,000 yen richer.  



[Elsewhere in the Park]

“Where did they go? They were just behind us a minute ago.”

Asami turned her head in various directions trying to catch sight of the missing threesome. It was nearing evening time and the park was beginning to fill up with people.

“They probably ran off somewhere to have a little fun.”

“Ah.”

Asami smiled lightly, she fully understood the hidden meaning behind what Makoto had implied.

“Gaki and Ai-chan I understand. But Reina too?”

“Haven’t you noticed something’s up between those three?”

Makoto reached for Konno’s hand and pulled her along when she began walking, trying to locate any eatery that served appetizing food.

“Reina has been hanging around Gaki-san much more lately. But it’s really unexpected. I’d always thought it would be…”

“Kamei?”

“You read my mind Mako-chan.”

Asami giggled softly at Makoto’s quip. Her laughter sounded like wind chimes made to sound by a gentle breeze and composed a beautiful melody with the birds chirping in the distance.

“That’s because I’m your soul mate KonKon.”

Makoto couldn’t resist rubbing Asami’s chubby cheeks between her hands that had grown bright red from her ‘soul mate’ comment.

“I love it when you get shy.”  

Asami looked down at the ground and shuffled her feet. She bashfully looked up again to gaze at Makoto and admired her profile silently as the other girl read the menu of the restaurant they were standing outside of.

“Hey, the menu looks alright. And they have private rooms….”

-- I'm so sorry to only be posting so late and kept you all waiting. So I did a quickie one here at school. I'll reply all your awesome remarks when I get home :)

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« Reply #125 on: September 06, 2006, 06:52:22 AM »
What I would pay to have seen the events in that Ferris Wheel. Haha. Awesome.

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« Reply #126 on: September 06, 2006, 07:01:40 AM »
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What I would pay to have seen the events in that Ferris Wheel. Haha. Awesome.

If I were the operator, I won't take Ai-chan's money as long as they'd let me watch the action. 10,000 yen is nothing compared to what's happening inside that carriage :P

Great quickie chapter lil_hamz! :thumbsup
« Last Edit: September 06, 2006, 07:05:15 AM by wordsworth »

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« Reply #127 on: September 06, 2006, 07:05:26 AM »
Oh damn straight. They could stay up there for however long they wanted, even if it meant me losing my job :p

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« Reply #128 on: September 06, 2006, 12:56:30 PM »
Love it!

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« Reply #129 on: September 06, 2006, 01:57:46 PM »
Oooh, I love this chapter! :heart: Great quicky you did! :] Can't wait for the next chapter! Reina + Ai-chan + Gaki = :heart::heart::heart::drool:
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« Reply #130 on: September 06, 2006, 04:31:06 PM »
I love this chapter. I love it very VERY much.

Reina x Ai x Risa :]!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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« Reply #131 on: September 06, 2006, 10:57:36 PM »
Who needs to choose between pairings when you can make them ALL together? Takanakagaki FTW :P

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« Reply #132 on: September 07, 2006, 01:32:03 AM »
ReinaxAi=Good
ReinaxAixRisa=Better
All 3 on a ferriswheel=Best
No clothes AND a rocking ferris wheel carriage=*faints*
If Helen Keller falls in the woods and no one is around, does she make a sound?

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« Reply #133 on: September 07, 2006, 01:03:57 PM »
Yuuyami: You now know if Reina was just watching or otherwise :P

KrazyForKamei: KameiShige is such a lovely couple. We need more of them :heart:

kodakumi & Tanachan: Threesomes so rules XD

DO Me DO Me: Don't think Eri can bear to hurt Sayu again :(

rndmnwierd: No, no cookies. *runs away* :)

wordsworth: You can only hold up the Ferris wheel that long :P  Exactly, whats 10,000 yen when you can see them in the flesh XD

icarianwings: They won't be able to have fun in the carriage if Kamei joined in too. Too cramped for 4 people to enjoy themselves XD

Saikami: I agree with all the icons you used :D

ChrNo: You're so sweet to post such a detailed comment. Loving ya sig too :)

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« Reply #134 on: September 07, 2006, 01:26:42 PM »
Oh come on, I'm sure we could fit Kamei in there somewhere. Or at least have fun trying :p

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« Reply #135 on: September 07, 2006, 01:37:33 PM »
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Oh come on, I'm sure we could fit Kamei in there somewhere. Or at least have fun trying :p


Well I guess we could try. Lemme see where they can have fun next *thinks hard* :D

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« Reply #136 on: September 07, 2006, 01:46:19 PM »
*rubs hands in glee* Bwa ha, excellent :D

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« Reply #137 on: September 08, 2006, 12:47:00 PM »
Chapter 24


[In the Restaurant]

“That will be all.”

Makoto thanked the waitress who brought the food in with a polite bow.

“You’re welcome. Is there anything else you might need?”

“Well, you could make sure we’re not disturbed.”

“Yes please. We prefer a quiet meal.”

Asami added in to notify the waitress. Nodding and bowing as she left the private room, she knelt down at the exit and promised once more.

“We will ensure that you are not disturbed. Please enjoy your meal.”

Making sure to check that they were truly by themselves, Makoto finally sat down next to Konno and heaved a sign of relief.

“I hope it doesn’t happen again.”

“I know. It was really quite a close shave.

Konno agreed recollecting what had happened the last time they went out together for a meal. Just when they thought they could settle down for a nice piping bowl of beef ramen, their presence was discovered by a group of noisy schoolgirls.

Not only did they not have a peaceful meal, they had to abandon the bowls of noodles without a single bite to make a hasty getaway.

“It should be safe here.”

Makoto tapped on the walls at a few different positions as an extra safety measure.

“Just double-checking.”

Grinning at Asami, Makoto moved closer and placed her left hand on Asami’s right shoulder, brushing her hair-ironed shoulder length hair in the process.

Looking at Konno with loving eyes, Makoto memorized every detail of her face and then leaned in to plant a tender kiss on Asami’s lips.

The kiss was short and Makoto embraced the surprised Konno tightly in her arms.

“Asami-chan, we will soon be separated by the vast oceans and won’t be able to see each other. Even then, I’m contented that you loved me.”

Now sobbing softly into Makoto’s shoulder, Konno felt like her heart was being ripped apart.

She had tried hard not to think about being separated from Makoto after their graduations. But the reality was becoming clear and there was no way of avoiding the day that was drawing nearer.

“I’m already fulfilled.”

Asami snuggled deeper into Makoto’s arms, she didn’t have to say anything more. For the other girl already knew what was in her heart. Soul mates never did need words to communicate.


-- Mako-chan and KonKon :heart: I miss them all over again :cry:
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« Reply #138 on: September 08, 2006, 02:04:05 PM »
Now I miss them too :cry:

Heartwarming chapter lil_hamz. It was enough to make me forget the events on the ferris wheel. :thumbsup

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« Reply #139 on: September 08, 2006, 02:13:21 PM »
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You're so sweet to post such a detailed comment.

well, that's all i can do to thank you XD


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Loving ya sig too

thank you again ! oh and look the rabbit winks at you ! he likes you too  XD :hammerself:

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Asami snuggled deeper into Makoto’s arms, she didn’t have to say anything more. For the other girl already knew what was in her heart. Soul mates never did need words to communicate.

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