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A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 13 is up!
« on: December 25, 2009, 04:47:51 PM »
"A Surplus of Lies"... Well, I haven't found a better name, and I'm with Christmas' hangover, so I don't wanna think much about another one XD

And well, I guess the title says much about the story, so I'll stay with this one... For now :grin:

And lastly, about the pairings... There will be a lot XD

CHAPTER 1

“Maki? Are you listening to me?” The shorter of the two girls asked annoyed.

“Yes…” The taller was in her own little world, not even looking at her companion.

“Maki? Look at me…”

“Yes…”

“Erm, this… Maki, you know I’ve been cheating on you with Aika since we started to date?” The younger was losing the little patience that she always showed to her girlfriend.

“Yes…”

“Maki!!!” She yelled irritated.

“What?!” She jumped surprised. “Baby, don’t be so loud!”

“I have to be! Would you mind listen to me?!”

“Ok, ok, sorry, but you don’t have to shout, Reina!” The older girl scolded.

“Oh, really? Well, can Miss Goto say why she doesn’t stop spacing out lately?” Reina asked, while her girlfriend stared at her a little distracted again…

“Yes…”

“Maki!!!! Wake up!!” She yelled furiously.

“Oh, s-sorry, my queen.” The soloist muttered.

“Are you ok? Is something bothering you?” Reina asked worried.

“Oh, yes, I’m fine… It’s just that I’ve been stressed at work…” She said in a low voice… and her girlfriend sighed, half worried, and half relieved since she at least could catch her attention.

“Ok, let’s say I believe you… you know I don’t, though…” She whispered looking at Maki, who was a little distracted again… “Maki!!!!”

“Ahhh! You’re going to have a deaf girlfriend if you keep doing that, damn!”

“No! I’m going to have a dead girlfriend if you keep doing that!” The shorter snapped.

“Ok, ok, sorry...” Maki said trying to calm Reina.

“Yeah, yeah… Now you say you’re sorry, and then you’ll be spacing out again…” The younger pouted, piercing Maki with her gaze.

“C’mon, don’t look at me like that! Let’s go, we’ll go shopping…” She said, jumping out of her couch and taking Reina by the wrist.

“Ok… but you pay!”

“I guess it’s fair…” Maki replied laughing.

***

“Ai-chan!”

“Oh, hi Gaki…” Ai said with a sad voice.

“Hey, what’s wrong?” She said observing her friend. “Lately you’ve been weird…”

Ai gave her a surprised look. “Really? I don’t think so…”

“Maybe you don’t think so… but it’s true…” Risa cut her off.

“I’m ok, you don’t have to worry…” Ai said cracking a weak smile.

“I know… And well, after all, you’re old enough to take care of yourself…”

“That’s right!” She said with a fake cheerful tone, while checking her clock. “Oh, sorry Gaki, I have to go, I’ve got leader business. See you!”

“Bye…” Risa replied as Ai closed the door of the dance room, leaving her behind.

Risa couldn’t help but feel betrayed. She knew Ai was hiding something to her… and she was her best friend, or maybe something more…

“Ai… When will I be able to say that I love you…?”

« Last Edit: January 25, 2010, 11:05:54 PM by Treykun »

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 1
« Reply #1 on: December 25, 2009, 08:43:28 PM »
Am i the first? XD

I'm voting for TakaGaki!   *If not i'm going to teleport Brat Gaki over here to terrorize you* :P

Maki/Reina is cute ...~ haha~ will some1 die again?  :(

what are they hiding..OMG............ don't tell me................... MAKI and AI are together!? LOL!


Merry Christmas!!

 

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 1
« Reply #2 on: December 25, 2009, 09:11:04 PM »
^ that would be interesting

Interesting start to this fic :strokes chin:

I'll wait for the updates hehe
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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 1
« Reply #3 on: December 25, 2009, 10:19:04 PM »
Maki is cheating on Reina with Ai!

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 1
« Reply #4 on: December 26, 2009, 04:19:13 AM »
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“No! I’m going to have a dead girlfriend if you keep doing that!” The shorter snapped.

 :lol:

Maki wasn't listening at all  XD

It's like
Reina: "I'll stab you using this fork"
Maki: "Okay"



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“Ai… When will I be able to say that I love you…?”

 :w00t: but wait that's  :(

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 1
« Reply #5 on: December 26, 2009, 09:23:48 AM »
New story? :w00t: This is gonna be interesting :twisted:


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“Erm, this… Maki, you know I’ve been cheating on you with Aika since we started to date?”
And she's saying to get Maki's attention or to take advantage of Maki's spaciness to confess? :lol:


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“Lately you’ve been weird…”
I thought Ai has always been weird? XD *dodges stink bombs from Ai's fans*

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 1
« Reply #6 on: December 26, 2009, 09:20:49 PM »
@amEthystx:

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*If not i'm going to teleport Brat Gaki over here to terrorize you*

:glasses: PLEASE!! DO IT!! XD
Nah, don't worry, I won't kill anyone... Well, maybe... :twisted:  So AiMaki, huh? I haven't seen that before XD

@kurosawa: Well, I won't make you wait too much... :grin:

@rndm: Wow, right to the point XD

@kRisZ: Yeah... a little sad... I know it, you want TakaGaki! XD

@badsaints:

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And she's saying to get Maki's attention or to take advantage of Maki's spaciness to confess?
:kekeke: What do you think, huh? XD

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I thought Ai has always been weird? XD *dodges stink bombs from Ai's fans*

Wait a minute! Weren't you an Ai fan too?! :grin:

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 1
« Reply #7 on: December 26, 2009, 09:28:11 PM »
CHAPTER 2

“So what do you think, Kame?”

“I don’t know, Gaki…” Eri said in a bored tone.

“Oh, come on… Can’t you see how weird is she acting?” Risa asked worried.

“Well, I see that she’s acting strange lately… But maybe she’s just stressed or something like that…”

“It isn’t that!” Risa cut her off.

“And why are you so sure?”

“Because… erm…” She muttered, trying a reason for say that.

“Because?! Because?!” Eri yelled impatiently.

“Because… it feels like is something sentimental…” Gaki replied as Kame looked at her.

“Eh?!” Eri asked surprised. “Do you mean that she’s in love or something like that?!”

“Well… yes…” Risa admitted reluctantly.

“I see… So that’s the problem…”

“What problem?” The slightly older asked puzzled.

“Well, I guess you’re sad cause you love Ai-chan…” She chuckled.

“Thanks for reminding me…” Risa said in a low voice. “I don’t know… It’s true that I love her… and I want her to tell me the truth…”

“Yeah, well. But obviously she’s not going to tell you something like that all of sudden…” She states.

“Yes… But I’ve asked her what’s wrong with her…”

“And what did she say?”

“She said that she’s ok.” Risa replied almost whispering. “But it sounded like an excuse…”

“Why?” Kamei asked, cutting her off.

“It sounded like an excuse because she runaway from me after that!” Risa said irritated.

“I see…”

“…” Niigaki didn’t say a single thing, she was lost in her own thoughts.

“What are you going to do?” Eri asked.

“About what?”

“About this… I think you should confess to Ai…” Risa looked at Eri wide eyed.

“What?! But how I’m suppose to say that?!”

“It’s the best that you can do…”

“No it isn’t.” She cut Kamei off. “I can’t go to Ai-chan and say to her how much I love her.”

“Yes, you can.” Eri stated.

“No.” She simply replied. “And what about you? If you think that it’s so easy to confess to someone… Why don’t you confess your feelings to Tanakacchi?”

“The situation is completely different.” She said.

“And why’s that?”

“Well, she’s dating Maki… And I’m not going to interfere between them… I wouldn’t do that to Reina…”

“Yes, but you could confess to her before she started to date Goto-san…” Risa stated.

“Yeah, but I always knew she was in love with her… So I decided to let her go… In fact I said to her she had to confess to Goto…”

“You did that?” Risa asked stunned.

“Yes…”

“You really love her, don’t you?”

“Yes…” Eri said in a low voice. “Risa, you shouldn’t loose your chance… as I did… go and confess to Ai.”

“I see…” Gaki-san muttered. “But what do you mean with “loose your chance”? It seems like you…”

“Like I had a chance with Reina? Yes.” Eri replied simply, leaving Risa stunned. “But I was a coward, and that was a really long time ago…”

“But… If you had your chance… then why…?”

“Simple,” Kamei cut her off. “Sayumi appeared in the game… and I hurt Reina’s feelings. Then, I tried to fix the things with her… but she had fallen in love with Goto…”

“That’s so sad…” Risa said softly.

“Yeah, but that was a really long time ago. So don’t worry about it.”

“But what happened between Sayu and you…?” Risa asked curiously. Kamei always avoided to talk about what happened between them… She hid it even to her best friend…

“I don’t want to talk about it.” Eri said sincerely. “But, hey, don’t change the subject! Just try to talk with Ai-chan… I’m sure that she wants to talk with you too, lately you’ve been distant with each other.”

“You think she’ll talk to me?” Risa asked.

“Yeah… She’s just the way she is… maybe she hasn’t been in a good mood lately…”

“Maybe…”

“Don’t worry about her, I’m sure she’ll be fine anytime soon.”

“Thanks Kame-chan!” Risa said, giving Eri a small kiss on the cheek. “I’m going to search for her. I’ll call you later, ‘kay?”

“Ok!” Kamei said, with a fake cheerful tone in her voice. “Good luck.”

Eri gazed at Risa, while the older was walking towards the door.

“Maybe one day…” She whispered, in a really low voice. “Maybe, Reina…”


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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 2 Updated
« Reply #8 on: December 26, 2009, 09:32:36 PM »
Aw Kamei :(

Risa should confess to Ai

POOR KAMEI!!!!

Good start :thumbup
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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 2 Updated
« Reply #9 on: December 26, 2009, 11:00:23 PM »
Rokkie love triangle is sad.

Takagaki is happy.

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 2 Updated
« Reply #10 on: December 27, 2009, 12:01:27 AM »
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“No.” She simply replied. “And what about you? If you think that it’s so easy to confess to someone… Why don’t you confess your feelings to Tanakacchi?”

Oh TanaKame   :mon fyeah:


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“Simple,” Kamei cut her off. “Sayumi appeared in the game… and I hurt Reina’s feelings. Then, I tried to fix the things with her… but she had fallen in love with Goto…”

Oh


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“I don’t want to talk about it.” Eri said sincerely.

Why not?


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“Ok!” Kamei said, with a fake cheerful tone in her voice. “Good luck.”

Is she in love with Risa now?  :O


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“Maybe one day…” She whispered, in a really low voice. “Maybe, Reina…”

Oh


@amEthystx:
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*If not i'm going to teleport Brat Gaki over here to terrorize you*

:glasses: PLEASE!! DO IT!! XD

I did ask amEthystx first, so shu be in line  :P

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 2 Updated
« Reply #11 on: December 27, 2009, 02:44:20 AM »
Lol, you had my attention with Reina x Maki xDDDDD

Interesting to see all these peculiar developments~

Can't wait to see what you have in store for everyone >:]

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 1
« Reply #12 on: December 27, 2009, 04:21:23 AM »
Let's see....
1) A maybe AiMakiReina? :O
2) Cheating Reika? :smhid
3) Potential TakaGaki :w00t:
4) Unrequited TanaKame :cry:
5) Love triangle(d) Rokkies ;)

So much drama :P And it's only the 2nd chapter! :lol:


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I thought Ai has always been weird? XD *dodges stink bombs from Ai's fans*

Wait a minute! Weren't you an Ai fan too?! :grin:
LOL Oh yeah...I forgot :lol:

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 2 Updated
« Reply #13 on: December 27, 2009, 09:40:37 PM »
@kurosawa: Yeah, poor Kame... I'm so evil... :twisted:

@rndm:

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Rokkie love triangle is sad.
Yeah, but I never said that it was "love"...  :kekeke:

@kRisZ:

@amEthystx:
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*If not i'm going to teleport Brat Gaki over here to terrorize you*

:glasses: PLEASE!! DO IT!! XD

I did ask amEthystx first, so shu be in line  :P

:rofl: Ok, ok :grin:

@Yuuyami:

-gives you a hardhat to protect from writer's block- <3
Wow, thanks! Lol, I needed it XD

@badsaints: Great, so now we have a list! XD But you'll have to add more pairings... :twisted:

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 2 Updated
« Reply #14 on: December 27, 2009, 09:51:45 PM »

CHAPTER 3

“Tell me what it is!” Reina yelled at her girlfriend.

“It’s nothing…” Maki replied at her for the hundredth time, in a bored tone.

“Oh, come on!” The shorter cried. “Tell me what it is!”

“It’s nothing…”

“Come on! What has been wrong with you lately?” Reina asked another time.

“Nothing has been wrong with me lately…” The soloist replied even more bored, as she opened her apartment’s door.

“And why do you keep spacing out then?”

“I told you!” Maki replied smirking. “Too much stress at work! It’s just that I’m tired…”

“That’s the worst excuse that I’ve ever heard from you!” Reina exclaimed dramatically, as she flopped down on Maki’s couch.

“The worst? Oh, please, I’ve said a lot much worse than this one.” Maki laughed, while the shorter looked at her.

“Very funny, indeed…” Reina pouted.

“Oh, come on… Do you really have to look at me with your puppy eyes?” She asked sceptically, and she sat down next to Reina.

“Yeah…” She replied, giggling. “But, hey, it’s just that I’m worried about you…”

“I know you’re worried, but you don’t have to be…” She cut her off, poking the younger on the cheek. “And, besides, I’m older… So I should be the one that worries the most.”

“Whatever…” Reina said reluctantly, as Maki hugged her and started to smooch her cheek and her neck…

***

“Come on, Ai, you can do this!” Ai yelled to herself as she practised her dance.

It was obvious that she was upset with something, maybe even angry. Her voice tone was way too aggravated…

“This isn’t going to disturb me!”

But as Ai continued with her monologue, someone entered in the room… And the leader of Morning Musume didn’t notice this person…

Risa observed Ai as the older yelled furiously while dancing…

“She isn’t going to interfere in my way!” She screamed in such a loud tone, that Risa thought she would end up deaf… But soon her thoughts about her hearing sense disappeared, as she noticed something weird in Ai’s words…

“She?!” Risa asked dumbfounded.

Ai turned around, and looked at her friend wide eyed.

“How long have you been here?” The older asked.

“Long enough to hear that…” Risa whispered, looking at Ai, who was trying to find an explanation.

“I was screaming to de-stress myself.” She said simply.

“I know…” Risa replied slowly. “But what do you mean by “she”?”

“…” Ai didn’t reply, she just looked at her friend with a sad face.

“Ai… I…” Risa muttered. “You… This means that the thing that has been bothering you… is…?”

“What?”

“Erm… Maybe a love problem…?” Risa asked, almost with fear in her voice.

“…” Ai stopped looking at her, and just started to avoid her friends gaze. “I’m not going to lie at you, Gaki-san. So, yes, maybe…”

“What do you mean…?” Risa asked softly, half worried, and half broken-hearted, because of Ai’s words.

“Well, I guess we’re old enough to know what I meant…” Ai said coldly.

“Oh, yeah? So… Who is this person?” The younger asked, trying to hold back her tears.

“It’s none of your business.” Takahashi replied even more coldly.

“But… we’re friends…” Risa muttered.

“Of course we are. But one thing is friendship, and another one is the privacy…” Ai replied simply. “So, I’m not going to tell you anything.”

“…” Risa looked at her lost in her own pain, but Ai didn’t notice this.

“So, don’t ask me anything more about this never again.” She concluded leading towards the door. “See you later.”


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Evil Ai!! XD

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 3 is up!
« Reply #15 on: December 27, 2009, 10:02:50 PM »
Evil Ai or a concerned friend  XD
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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 3 is up!
« Reply #16 on: December 28, 2009, 12:17:46 AM »
How NOT to answer difficult questions from your girl(friend)


 :thumbup A good makeout session with your irritating girlfriend is a good way to distract her from asking more questions


 :thumbup If you want to evade answering any question from your best friend, feign anger and bring in guilt factor, if any. Also bring in the privacy issue if persistant


source: Treykun's A surplus of lies

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 3 is up!
« Reply #17 on: December 28, 2009, 12:27:10 AM »
 :smhid Maki.
  :( Reina
 :smhid Ai.
 :cry: Risa

That about sums it up.

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« Reply #18 on: December 28, 2009, 02:14:47 AM »
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started to smooch her cheek and her neck…

 :twisted:


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“…” Risa looked at her lost in her own pain, but Ai didn’t notice this.

Takahashi!  :angry:

But maybe if she'd seen that things would be different.?.

Ai: "Oh Risa" *Hugs Risa* "I can't tell you right now that you're the 'she' It's my de-stressing time"



How NOT to answer difficult questions from your girl(friend)

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Re: A Surplus of Lies, Chapter 3 is up!
« Reply #19 on: December 28, 2009, 03:45:14 AM »
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“Of course we are. But one thing is friendship, and another one is the privacy…” Ai replied simply. “So, I’m not going to tell you anything.”

- Who is that?!  :on freeze:

*Giving out Q-number for brat Risa Terrorizing Sessions~*

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