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R I V E R – Extra II – B – [MaYuki] – (8/1/13)
« on: September 11, 2011, 06:20:30 AM »
R I V E R


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Stupid Sexy Acchan:
A collection of shorts written in dedication to Takahashi Minami's hormonal dilemma, also known as Takahashi Maeda Atsuko.



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R I V E R

Chapter 1
(Posted 9/10/11)

A/N: Since I suck at this whole writing thing, apologies for any out-of-character-ness llOTL This is my first time writing since I spend most of my time proofreading instead x.x
Also, sorry if this idea has been used before @_@

Warning: Mild language and violence ahead.

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A/N: And that's Chapter 1~
Sorry if anything is unrealistic, particularly the military rankings and other military stuff llOTL If anything seems unclear, feel free to ask~

As you can see, this is based around AKB's River PV. Some things may or may not be accurate >_>

Also, thanks to arisa03 for assuring me that this is not a piece of crap llOTL

Thank you for reading, and please leave a comment or something ; v ; *shot for begging*

Anon out~
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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #1 on: September 11, 2011, 06:22:54 AM »
It's not a piece of crap. It's awesome! <333

"Yuuchan language!" Running joke ftw. LOLOLOLOL I'm loving the language the post. xDD I guess this is the first AKB fic I've read with so much cursing, from Yuko too. LOLOL "Yuuchan language!" Oh yezz forever funny. LOLOL

Army themed AKB fic ftw <33333 I do not mind reassuring you every chapter that everything is awesome. <333333
Like I’m the most calm... Like, it must definitely be because, Like when we enter, I’ll be hurrying. But Because Junjun is older, I can calm down? I don’t really know, Like I just absolutely want her there beside me. Whenever we go abroad, if Junjun is absolutely not beside me, I absolutely won’t go. Something like that. -- Tanaka Reina about Junjun.

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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #2 on: September 11, 2011, 06:37:50 AM »
Omg omg omg omg omg.....THIS WASN'T BAD *smacks* ZuZu I swear ;___;/ That was effen awesome!

Yuko....She was my favorite in this  :heart:  :heart:  :heart: I feel like, she should cuss more 8D  I need chapter 2 pronto! I must read more awesomeness!

Update soon  :heart: *rubs jaws from laughing*

P.S First and last sentence FTW
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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #3 on: September 11, 2011, 06:40:19 AM »
wah~~~ AKB's soldi fic FTW!!!  :w00t:

I listen to river while reading it and its awesome!!! :twothumbs :twothumbs

“Yuuchan, language!”
I LOLed at this  :hiakhiakhiak:

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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #4 on: September 11, 2011, 06:42:43 AM »
UGH THAT WAS AWESOME~!

RIVER's whole concept was cool so the fact that you based this off that makes it x1000 times better.

Uh so yeah, update I can not wait~! :thumbup
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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #5 on: September 11, 2011, 07:17:08 AM »
LOL THIS IS FABULOUS!

I love it! please continue! I look forward to it! ^^v

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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #6 on: September 11, 2011, 08:35:12 AM »
I LOVE IT! It was hilarious and well-written! I dunno why but I definitely laughed at Mayuyu and Yuki's fire in the hole thing! And Yuko's language! It was so entertaining! And how you made it based on their song River was so.... INVENTIVE AND CREATIVE( aren't they the same? lol) !!!! MORE PLEASE!
Had a withdrawal, so now I'm planning to fall in love with the couples all over again

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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #7 on: September 11, 2011, 08:59:34 AM »
nice fanfic  :twothumbs

Yuko's language  :lol: wanting for more Yuko's language in the next chapter  :lol:


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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #8 on: September 11, 2011, 04:48:36 PM »
Yuko keep swearing! :lol:
But I can't blame her though :lol:

I  can't wait for more
please update soon.

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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #9 on: September 11, 2011, 04:54:56 PM »
Yeah... this is definitely better than the MV itself. Good Job!!! :thumbsup

And the very first time I see Eguchi included in a fic... being hated since the start. :grin:


Definitely waiting for more thrills you've offered here in future chapters...
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Re: RIVER - Chapter 1 (9/10/11)
« Reply #10 on: September 11, 2011, 06:34:07 PM »
NISHIIIIIIIIIIIIII YOU WROTE SOMETHINGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG OH MY GOD

*freaks out*

That was amazing! Humor + action in one awesome chapter~

I really like where this is going. Though, since it is military based and there are guns... Makes me wonder if there shall be death!

Also, grenade loving cyborg FTW.
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Re: R I V E R - Chapter 2 (9/11/11)
« Reply #11 on: September 12, 2011, 04:11:13 AM »
R I V E R

Chapter 2
(Posted 9/11/11)

Warning: Mild language and violence ahead.

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Obligatory A/N:

Samuel L. Jackson reference FTW.

I should warn you all that I can’t normally update as fast as this. Real life likes to intrude upon my happy cyber world llOTL And ‘cause I’m lazy, but that’s another thing >_>

Once again, thanks goes out to arisa03 for helping me feel better about this whole writing business llOTL Thank you also for a few ‘quality’ adjustments ;D

Also, thank you very much to all the reviewers! Each review greatly motivated me to hurry up and get started on Chapter 2, which I was planning procrastinating on LOL
No, I did not read them multiple times ; v ;
Again, thank you very much ; v ; b

Of course, thanks still goes to the readers that don’t comment (I am that type after all LOL)
Thank you for still donating a bit of your time to my little tale ; v ;

Anon out~
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Re: R I V E R - Chapter 2 (9/11/11)
« Reply #12 on: September 12, 2011, 04:15:48 AM »
*is still LOL-ing to death at this chapter*

Crap Acchan, Stupid Sexy Acchan. LOLOLOLOL. xDDD Quality adjustments ; v ; /!!! Man, I don't know what to say comment now, because I already did. LOLOLOL You should really put that "TM" LOLOLOL xDDDDD I can't wait for Chapter 3 now. And some evil plan. 8DDDD >xDDDDDDDDDDD
Like I’m the most calm... Like, it must definitely be because, Like when we enter, I’ll be hurrying. But Because Junjun is older, I can calm down? I don’t really know, Like I just absolutely want her there beside me. Whenever we go abroad, if Junjun is absolutely not beside me, I absolutely won’t go. Something like that. -- Tanaka Reina about Junjun.

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Re: R I V E R - Chapter 2 (9/11/11)
« Reply #13 on: September 12, 2011, 05:08:18 AM »
Ahhhh I love everything about this chapter~!

I could just ramble on about the things I like about specifically in this chapter but honestly Takamina's mumbling was my favorite lol "Stupid sexy Acchan" indeed.

Oh and also...
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"And even if Kojiharu would do that, she’ll probably say something like ‘Oh, Yuuchan, I’m sorry, I just really need the shower right now. I- it’s not like I want to see you w- wet and n- naked or anything, you b- baka."

 :thumbup

Yeah please continue?

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Re: R I V E R - Chapter 2 (9/11/11)
« Reply #14 on: September 12, 2011, 05:19:21 AM »
Man!!! I love this fic!! So hilarious..  :lol: 

But i just read halfway though.. LOL.. I'll continue after my exam...  XD

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Re: R I V E R - Chapter 2 (9/11/11)
« Reply #15 on: September 12, 2011, 06:02:41 AM »
This chapter is full or LOLs~ xD Good job! I really like it~

Someone should kill that Colonel... ^^v

Cmon Yuki~ Ya know you want Mayu on top~ ;D

LOL~ I still can't stop laughing~! Please update soon~!♥

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Re: R I V E R - Chapter 2 (9/11/11)
« Reply #16 on: September 12, 2011, 06:37:34 AM »
I love this chapter!! please continueeeeee~  :panic: :panic:

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Re: R I V E R - Chapter 2 (9/11/11)
« Reply #17 on: September 12, 2011, 07:10:19 AM »
LOL KOJIHARU ROLL REFERENCE. That's all my mind could focus on. XD

Ahahahaha, Mayu and Yuko are the ultimate perverted tag team. Black Yuki FTW. Pfftt, Nishi, you made me laugh so many times this chapter.

Great job~ Keep up da good work~
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Re: R I V E R - Chapter 2 (9/11/11)
« Reply #18 on: September 12, 2011, 08:24:06 AM »
TAKAMINA ;______;///

This is just...it made me happy, sad, and angry (At ze biznitch....) but but but.....MOSTLY HAPPY  :heart:  :heart:  :heart:

I was laughing a lot of parts, especially the Kojiharu parts and Takamina mumbling parts xD This was an amazing chapter~~ I can't wait for your next one  :heart:

Update soon! :D

Also.....you liiiiied on the number parts! Not that I minded 8D If it was true, make sure it is mother f***ing Eguchi~ * attempts to hide*
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Re: R I V E R - Chapter 2 (9/11/11)
« Reply #19 on: September 12, 2011, 08:42:05 AM »
YUKO Lol!!!!~


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“Yuuchan, language!”




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“No, no, I’m sure Takamina’s butt is bigger than Miichan’s.”

“No, no, I’m sure that Miichan’s butt is bigger than Takamina’s.”

The Truth is Miichan have bigger Butt!!!!!!!!

 :dunno: Miichan's Butt......

 :on bleed: I Want to touch it!!!!~ :on gay:

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