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Carnations - WMatsui Oneshot - COMPLETED
« on: April 16, 2013, 02:13:26 AM »
my first time doing this.
 :shocked Im nervous
So i think about a fanfic  :D
sorry my english I speak spanish  XD

I hope you like let's go...
   
                                        CARNATIONS                     

My name is Matsui Rena and this is my last year, this year I have sell carnations due my graduation...
there's a girl in the second year... that I've been watching and she to me, nearly about two years.
I don't know her name, but everytime I pass beside of her, we look and that gives me butterflies and happiness, all the time.

                         In class...

-Teacher:  Matsui Rena group, you have to sell and give the carnations in the second year.
Thought Rena (she is just right there, in that class)

The time to sell is come and Rena go to second year.

                         2º year...

I go to her class and she was there watching me when I was talking, she raised her hand and she buy a carnations, I was not the person who sold carnations. I was really surprised maybe is a good thinks or maybe not... I was confused.

Pass time...  Rena go to give the carnations.

- Im here to give the carnations, I went to deliver the carnations, person by person, in the end I pass her carnation...I approached slowly to his seat instead and I give her the carnation looking to her eyes, In the carnation had a card, the card say
"You are cute, daisuki".
She look me and she say
-Can we talk on the playground?
-ok.

I left the classroom and I was waiting the bell....*RIIIING*

I was really nervous and I see her out, she see me and say.
-Girl: you can tell me now
-Rena: my carnation is not enough?
-Girl:.....you have a carnation there, right?     
-yes
-can you give me one, I want to give it to someone.
-eeh! eh eh aah mm here.
-I don't now you class, sorry, but always is better do the things in person... here a carnation, this represent all the year I was see you, RENA.
-Oh, thanks, worth selling carnations.
Rena hug the girl and she kiss her cheeks "Chu"
                       
                     The bell ---- RIIIIING RIIIIING....

-I have to go, my friend is alone.
-I wait for you in the exit, I wanna go with you.
-Okay.
 Rena grab the girl hand and she kiss her cheeks gently, Rena go to see her friend and go to class.

                      Exit...

She was just there, we went and she took my hand but she dropped because there were more students.
-You live far? I wanna walk with you.
-A few blocks away.
-I live here, can you accompany to my house.
-of course.
we walk and talk about us, and we arrived to her house.
-My name is Jurina
-That was always I want to know, your name...
-I have to enter, I hope see you more than just a few looks.
People around but jurina doesnt care, she just close her to Rena, she grabbed her hand, she closer and hug her, the two look...
Jurina kiss her  and does not care about the people around she just want kiss her, always pray for this day.( sound really stupid )
The kiss is long and  more passionate, because the call, they separated.
-Don't forget this carnation, the carnations is know for be the flower more lasting than others, this is going to last...

 :shocked I don't know if is good or not, please comment and judging me with no fear.  :panic:
if this is good and you guys want more maybe can do it like a history
more aggressive grrr  XD
« Last Edit: October 21, 2017, 08:54:41 PM by sophcaro »

Offline cisda83

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Re: Carnations - WMatsui Oneshot
« Reply #1 on: April 16, 2013, 03:01:35 AM »
It's quite good... I think...

quite sweet too

But I think there is no dept in the story at all...

Thank you for the story....

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Offline Rena-chan Daisuki

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Re: Carnations - WMatsui Oneshot
« Reply #2 on: April 16, 2013, 07:10:42 AM »
it's so sweet
Hope to see another wmatsui fics a lot more
i miss them
thank you for the story

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