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« on: June 03, 2005, 01:31:18 AM »
yeh i know its been posted >_< when will the guy do a new chapter? i think im addicted to it. the thing is though, its not even that explict, it's just good and interesting writing.

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« Reply #1 on: June 03, 2005, 04:12:18 AM »
:lol: Thats bs.

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« Reply #2 on: June 03, 2005, 11:03:34 AM »
it's not that a good writing...

even I could do it better. :roll:

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« Reply #3 on: June 03, 2005, 11:50:46 AM »
It's not that good writing, but she's the only one to start writing a long, never-ending fic like that, including pretty much all Momusu members... She deserves respect. It's fun reading it, too. :lol: Bonus points for sort of pimping Maki and Nacchi together. Oh gosh. I need NacchiMaki slash. :(
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« Reply #4 on: June 03, 2005, 12:10:08 PM »
i find it fun  :oops:

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« Reply #5 on: June 03, 2005, 03:06:59 PM »
fun... but, kinda unconsistent. Too many commas. Lots of storylines but they don't lead anywhere. Again too many commas (really, that bugs me a lot, esp. combined with the poor writting skills). A too childish feeling. It looks more like an experiment "hey let's place this and this couple and see what happens", so that people wow "yeah Maki-Nacchi how original!".

But anyway, I'm a harsh critic. :roll:

speaking of wandering storylines, I guess I should keep on with my own business :P

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« Reply #6 on: June 03, 2005, 03:16:09 PM »
:| Ooooooooooooookay.
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« Reply #7 on: June 03, 2005, 04:44:10 PM »
I've been following this fanfic too.  The writer is a university student, I think.  So he/she may just be taking a break for a vacation.  Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon...I also wanna find out what happens in the Nacchi/Maki part.   :cry:  :cry:  :cry:

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« Reply #8 on: December 29, 2005, 06:52:35 PM »
I read a bit of it.  it was interesting

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« Reply #9 on: December 30, 2005, 04:24:34 AM »
I though it was kinda cool. I could use the inspiration to get back into my fics. I still gotta finish that Maki/Ayaka thing and my Konno manga. Oh well.

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« Reply #10 on: December 30, 2005, 02:11:47 PM »
Quote from: Jabronisaur
I still gotta finish that Maki/Ayaka thing and my Konno manga.


Yes. Yes you certainly do.  :wink:

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« Reply #11 on: June 05, 2006, 09:11:37 AM »
The Sayumi thing was good. The writing wasnt great I will admit but atleast she put a lot of effort into it and wrote some pretty cool things.

btw, the writer is a girl

(me? Im a Miki/Aya fan..lol thats probably the only thing that I thought the fic could have needed. A bit more of them but I was happy with that last chapter I read baout the kinky dream)


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« Reply #12 on: June 06, 2006, 05:29:59 AM »
The words are kinda hard to read xD
There isn't any space between, where's paragraph T_T
Anyways, keep up the good job ~

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« Reply #13 on: July 08, 2006, 01:23:39 PM »
Wow thanks guys! I didnt realize i'd already been pimped on here!
And yeah, thanks for the criticizm, seriously. My writing isn't very good but I am just starting up, hopefully it will become better and I can impress you all!
(P.S: I'm a year 12 high school student)

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« Reply #14 on: July 08, 2006, 09:39:48 PM »
I enjoyed reading that fic. "In my dreams volume 1" was good as well. :D
I hope Aya will have another kinky dream soon. Or it could be Miki's turn next time. :drool:
Sorry for being so ecchi. :P

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« Reply #15 on: July 09, 2006, 01:03:14 AM »
No need to be sorry, why do you think I wrote the fic in the first place?

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« Reply #16 on: July 09, 2006, 02:18:18 AM »
True! :D
So...will there be another dream soon?

By the way I like how Miki teases Rika in your fic.
« Last Edit: July 09, 2006, 02:23:21 AM by Elle_Driver »

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« Reply #17 on: July 09, 2006, 09:07:59 AM »
Aw thanks, and yes, I am currently in process of writing a new dream session, a new diary entry and a new chapter, AND an introduction chapter for my friends who are reading it and have no idea who any of the girls are ^^.

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« Reply #18 on: July 09, 2006, 01:41:20 PM »
Yay, good news! Can't wait to read your new stuff. :drool:

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« Reply #19 on: July 16, 2006, 07:47:55 AM »
In my dreams is so hot! I cant wait for the next part.
It took me 2 days to read start to finish and re-read some chapters that I had forgotten. In total I think I spent maybe ...12 hours on that site. Yes, I know thats only one day but I needed to sleep and work!

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