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« Reply #40 on: November 07, 2006, 02:41:16 AM »
Holy carp ChrNo.... 0_0 That's just, wow...

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« Reply #41 on: November 07, 2006, 03:02:45 AM »
well considering how many chapters that ChrNo didn't comment on yet, it's understandable lol..though it still pretty amazing..O_O

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« Reply #42 on: November 07, 2006, 11:47:42 AM »
M was called by the Dyed-Hair Man early in the morning.

"Do you know how to drive, M?"
"Does watching Initial D count?"
"Okay. Forget I asked you that. I need you to drive Risa-chan to their place. She wants to visit her parents. But please, don't do some crazy stunts with the car."
"Why can't the black suit guys do that? I don't have a driver's license, you know."
The Dyed-Hair man gave him an envelope.
"If that's your problem, then here's your license. The keys are inside. None of the other security personnel are available so this is just a small favor."
" What kind of ride do I get?"
"A Mercedes Benz CLS 500. But please be careful with it."
"Cool!"
"Go down now and wait for Risa-chan. I'll tell her that you'll be accompanying her."
M opened the envelope and looked at the license.
"Hey, how come my name here is Seichi Jin?"
"Don't you like it?"
"How would you like it if you were named 'Minute Man'?"
"Point taken. We'll change it next time. Just use that for now."

M went to the parking area and looked for the vehicle. Then he saw the only CLS 500 in the area. He stepped in and started the engine.

"Dang! This looks like it was bought just a few days ago! The plastic on the seats are even intact. If they can buy these kinds of rides, how come they can't give me a motorcycle? D and K are gonna be jealous when they hear about this."
"Michii-kun!"
He looked at the voice's owner. It was Risa. But someone was with her: Ai.
"Ai-chan wants to come along too. My mom hasn't seen her for a long time. You wouldn't mind, would you Michii-kun?"
"Of course not." M replied as he looked at them. "Welcome aboard, Takahashi-san!"
Ai just bowed to thank him.
"Damn! I thought Gaki-san was gonna sit beside me but Takahashi-san's so pretty. I still can't get over her new PB and now she's going on a ride with us. Come to think of it, we were just talking about her last night..."

Last Night. Yes. This story has flashbacks too. Every story has flashbacks.

"Hey guys, have you seen Takahashi-san's new photobook? Man it's hot! Where's the tissue?"
"Man, you still haven't changed M! Don't you have anything else in your head aside from porn? What are gonna do with the tissue? Clean up your mess? We just cleaned the sink earlier." D said.
"I'm gonna clean my helmet. It's a bit dusty. Are you saying that I'm a fapper? And excuse me, I don't use the sink!"
"Yeah, what gave you that idea, D? He doesn't look he would fa..." K said.
"Thanks for defending me, K."
"I'm not finished M. You don't look like you would fap for someone her age. I thought you liked younger girls?"
D and K laughed as M gave a middle finger to each of them.
"Tanaka-san was right. Maybe you should set it free!" K added.
"I'm going to get you someday, K! Speaking of Takahashi-san, I have a question. She just turned twenty, right? Where's the Guardian assigned to her?"
D and K looked at each other. There was a sudden change in the atmosphere. It seemed that that they didn't want to talk about it.
"Come on guys. Is this some kind of secret too?"
"Alright." K said. "Since you're one of us I guess it's alright for you to know about R."
"What about him?"
"He broke..." D said softly.
"Oh no! Don't tell me he's brokeback like you, D!" M interrupted.
"This is not a laughing matter. R, he broke the rule."
"You mean..."
"Yes. He broke the rule." K continued. "He was assigned to Takahashi-san but their relationship was that more than of Guardian-Assignment. When the management learned about this, they tried to break them apart. They told him that he was going to be assigned to another girl but he insisted to stay with Takahashi-san. The management forced Takahashi-san to tell him that since she's already an adult, she won't need him anymore. He left even if he knew that she was just forced to do that. After that we haven't heard from him."
"I knew it. Takahashi-san is a succubus."
"What made you say that, M?" K asked him.
"He probably hasn't met Fujimoto-san or Ishikawa-san yet." D added.
"Didn't you see her doing the split in the new PB?"
"She did what?" the other two said as they turned on their WiFi to verify M's claims.
"That's what you guys get for not checking it out. Anyway, did R tell her that we're..."
"I hope not." K answered.
"Where is he now?"
"We don't know."
"What about GPS?"
"They can't track him. He was also able to override the system for remote shutdown." D said.
"Did they tamper with her memories?"
"They didn't." D continued. "They felt that Takahashi-san was old enough to handle these kinds of situations."
"I see. So that's why there's a bit of loneliness in her eyes. Well, maybe I can take R's place. If H can handle seven girls, I bet I can handle two."
"Only in your wildest dreams." K interrupted. "R was like the perfect Guardian, except he was also the first one to break the rules. You have no match against him. In battle, in looks or even in just being a Guardian."
"Looks like you guys have a lot of respect for him. I hope I can meet him someday. To prove to you guys that I'm better so that you'll respect me too." M gloated.
"I have a feeling he's still watching over Takahashi-san. So better be careful, M. Watch your mouth." K added.
"I will. Now where's the tissue?"
"S took it with him when he left. He said he wanted to stop you from killing trees. Tissue paper is paper too, you know." D said.
"That fapper! He’s only gonna use it for himself!"

Present


"So Ai-chan, you haven't finished your story about Retsu-chan last time."
"Retsu? So that's what they called him." M said to himself.
"Oh. Can I just tell it to you some other time, Gaki-san?" Ai said as she used the rearview mirror to look at M.
"Don't mind me girls. Just pretend I'm not here."
"We can't do that Michii-kun." Risa said as she puffed her cheeks.
"Yeah. I think you won't forget it once you hear it, right Mitsui-kun?" Ai said.
"Uh-oh. I think she knows about us. I have to make sure then." M thought. "What made you say that, Takahashi-san?" he asked.
"Just a feeling, Mitsui-kun. Just a feeling."
"I thought so." M said.
"What are you guys talking about?" Risa asked.
"Nothing Gaki-san." Ai said. "Oh remember the time when we were shooting the All For One video?'
"She changed the topic. She's good." thought M.
"Oh yeah. I remember that. You were trying to kiss me back there." Risa said.
"Takahashi-san kissing Gaki-san? I need to see this! Searching...Wow wow wow seishun!!! I knew it Takahashi-san is indeed a succubus!"
"What about you, Michii-kun? Do you ever have time to visit your parents?" Risa asked him.
"No." M answered her question with one word but Risa felt that M didn't want to talk about it so she asked him another question."
"When is your birthday, Michii-kun?"
"It's....It's close."
"I see."
"Yep. It's close."
M didn't know how to answer those questions: Questions about his family and questions about his personal life. "I should have asked S how he answers these kinds of questions." he said to himself. Then he then noticed something when he looked at the side mirror. "Hey, that person on that scooter has been following us since we left the office."

Risa's House

Risa and Ai started to walk inside. They asked M to go inside too but M said that he had to watch over the car.
"So that car's more important than me, is it Michii-kun." Risa said as she puffed her cheeks again.
"Of course not. But something if happens to it, if it gets scratched or dented, they're gonna use my parts for replacement."
"You're parts?" Ai asked as she raised one of her eyebrows.
"I mean, they're gonna take it off my payslip."
"Alright. But come in later. I want you to meet my parents." Risa said
"Okay." M said as he turned on his radar to check if there were any suspicious people nearby. He was only able to pick up one and it was the rider of the scooter that was following them. He zoomed at the rider and he saw that it was using some kind of a camera with ultra zoom lens. "Techie. I have to be careful." M said as he tried to make his move. The rider moved closer to Risa's house but stayed in an unnoticeable position. After settling in an inconspicuous spot, he took out the camera.

"Sorry to bother you, but I can't let you do that." M said as he appeared behind.
The rider panicked and started to run. M caught his trench coat and ripped it in the process. As the rider fell down, the sunglasses and the cap he was wearing was thrown off. M moved closer.
"Now tell me, who do you work.....for....You're a girl?" M was surprised to see that the rider was a female. "And you're cute. And you're wearing a skirt. And I can see your..."

The girl stood and slapped M. This stunned M and she took the opportunity to run but she bumped into a man. The man had a gentle look on his face but his hair covered his left eye.
"Please help me. That pervert is after me." the girl pleaded.
The man held her hand and gave her a shock to knock her unconscious. M saw what happened.

"Why did you do that? That girl didn't look like she was a Graft user! You could have made her sleep without shocking her!"
"Graft is not just a drug. Everyone has graft in them. You should be thanking me. If I didn't do this, it might have been you who would have attacked this girl. And she should thank me as well. Who knows what you would have done to her while she's unconscious." the man said as he placed the girl on one of the benches.
"Hahaha. That's funny. You must be R. I don't know why they talk so highly of you but attacking a defenseless girl is wrong!"
"But she is the enemy, isn't she? An enemy is an enemy. Male or female, young or old, and so on. Yes I am R. You must be the new guy. Now I feel sorry for Niigaki-san for ending up with someone like you."
"Don't mess with me!" M said as he sent a punch towards R. R parried it and tried to hit M with a kick but M was able to dodge and delivered a kick while doing so. R blocked it however.
"Nice moves. I'm impressed. Looks like we have a lot in common." R said.
"Too bad I'm not like you. I'm not going to ditch someone I care about." M replied.

What M just said shortened the fuse of R's temper. He ran towards M, ready to impale him with his hand when he heard a familiar voice that stopped him before he could lay a finger on M.

"Retsuya."

Both Guardians looked at the owner of the voice. M was astonished at the way the two looked at each other in the eye. It was like the way two ill-fated lovers look at each other the first time they meet and the time they bid farewell. The first one who blinks loses it all.

"Ai..."

There was silence.

There was tension.

And there's a continuation...
« Last Edit: November 27, 2006, 04:52:16 AM by wordsworth »

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« Reply #43 on: November 07, 2006, 02:11:02 PM »
Argh! *slaps forehead* That's just not right man, lol.

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« Reply #44 on: November 07, 2006, 04:59:40 PM »
RAWR~CLIFFHANGER?!?! gahh...wordsworth, you sure don't make it easy for us do you? such an important scene...>_< and now you're just making me wait for this next one x_X POST IT SOON~!

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« Reply #45 on: November 07, 2006, 08:22:15 PM »
man....just when it was getting good.....that's just.......*faints in anticipation*

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« Reply #46 on: November 07, 2006, 09:06:16 PM »
gah cliffhanger!! >.<
THis is getting cool, metting Ai's old guardian and watching them fight, tension tension tension!!!

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« Reply #47 on: November 08, 2006, 05:01:08 AM »
TAKAGAKI!!!!! Yippee!!!
YAY a love story for Ai-chan, I can't wait :yay:
Oh the last part was awesome, all that pain and love :baa60776:

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« Reply #48 on: November 10, 2006, 09:51:14 AM »
"Mommy, look! It's Takahashi Ai of Morning Musume! And that other guy is a Kamen Rider! And that other guy is... " a girl shouted and pointed at them.
"Hitomi darling, what did I say about cosplayers?"
"That they need to dress up like that so that they can get back the money they used to make that costume?"
"Right. Now let's go before you decide to become a cosplayer too."
"Okay. But that girl looks really familiar..."

With dumbfounded looks and open mouths, the eyes of the three followed the girl and her mother as they left. Then they looked at each other, the looks on their faces asking if any of them knew them or where the heck did those two come from.

Cosplayers?

Anyway, we now continue with where we stopped.

"Why did you leave, Retsuya?"
"Did you forget already? You're the one who told me that you don't need me anymore."
"But...I...you know that...I was...I didn't..." Ai wanted to walk closer to R but she felt that if she did, it would only increase the tension and the gap that separated them.
"How come you can't make up your mind now, Ai? You were able to say it straight to my face that night."
"I'm sorry about what I said that night."
"No you're not!"
"You've changed."
"No I haven't."
"Do you really believe that I want you to leave me? What do you want me to say, Retsuya? I don't understand."
"Maybe I should be the one asking you something, Ai.  What do you really want? What do you really feel?"
"I want to be...I want...you...I told you I'm sorry...You're scaring me...Retsu...I'm sorry...I'm sorry..." Ai covered her eyes and started to cry.
"That's what I failed to do before, so that we wouldn't have ended like this. I'd fight for you Ai, you know that. But you didn't fight for me. Goodbye." R said as he prepared to leave.
"No one needs you more than I need you." Ai said as she wept.  R stopped for a moment.
"Don't you think it's a bit late to tell me that, Ai?"
"Ehem. This is my story right? How come this is the only time I get to say something?" M said. "Fourteen lines before me. Sheesh!"

R looked at M with a threatening glare. For the first time, M got scared. But he didn't look away.

"Okay okay. Maybe I should leave now so you two could fight more then make up and embrace and be mushy. Or we can always do a group hug. Yeah, that would be better. Group hug, anyone?"
"Oh it's Retsu-chan!" The two Guardians looked to whom the voice belonged to. It was Risa. She was coming to their direction and waving at them.
"Hello Gaki-san. Long time no see. Belated Happy Birthday by the way."
"Thanks! Good thing you didn't forget about it or I would have been mad at you. Hey, why is Ai-chan crying?" she said as she comforted her.
"I..." before R could finish, M answered for him.
"Maybe she's just happy to see him." R looked at him again but this time it was to thank him for covering him up.
"Come on, let's go to my place. My mama's almost done with the food she's cooking." Risa said as she grabbed their hands and dragged them to her house.
M sent a message to R." What about the girl?"
"I already erased her memory. That was just a mild shock. She'll wake up in a while. No need to worry."
"So you shock and erase memory at the same time. Not bad."
"Thanks a lot by the way."
"No problem. Just a question, are you always hot-tempered?"
"Not all the time."
"You were really going to kill back there, weren't you?"
"Nah. I was just going to teach you a lesson."
"I see. They told me you were the best but it seems like what you do best is hurt cute helpless girls."
"I'm good at hurting guys too so don't start things with me."
"Hey, I 'm just kidding. At least I know that there's something I'm better at than you."
"Like what?"
"I look a lot better. Admit it." M said as he stroked his chin.
"You're crazy."
"Thank you."

***
Risa introduced M to her parents.
"How old are you, son?" her dad asked.
"I'm just nineteen. I'm not old yet dad, I mean sir."
"Really now. Hehe. I like you boy. But don't do anything funny to my daughter or I'm going to get you."
"Come on papa, don't scare him." Risa pouted.
"Yes dear. Please excuse him Mitsui-kun." Risa's mom said.
"No problem ma'am."
"Now why don't you guys proceed to the dinning room so we could start."
"Umm. Gaki-san, I think I have to go now." R said.
"Nonsense. I'm not letting you get away this time Retsu-chan. You're with me, aren't you, Ai-chan?"
"Of....course."Ai replied. "I....missed him..... a lot." she added but she couldn't look at R.
As they walked to the dining room, M nudged R and sent him another message.
"Come on now, here's your chance to make up. Hold her hand like this." M said as he grabbed what he thought was Risa's hand.
"No thanks." R replied.
"You're a bad boy, son." M was shocked when he found out that it was the hand of Risa's dad.
"Sorry sir, I just wanted to find out if you had soft hands." Was M's excuse.
"Trying to hit on my dad, aren't you Michii-kun? I'm jealous." Risa said.
"Well you should be. You dad's hands are softer than yours." M said defensively.
"Is not!" the reaction queen exclaimed as he hit M's arm.
"Ouch! See, your hands are as hard as rocks."
They laughed after that. Even Ai and R.

Risa was the only one who talked a lot while they were at the table. She told what happened to her and the other girls these past days to her parents. Her dad would be the one to react the most whenever Risa told something funny or surprising. Maybe that's where she got her reacting skills.

Ai didn't talk at all. It looked like she was in her own little world again. She just smiled and nodded whenever Risa mentioned her. And she still couldn't look at R.

R, on the other hand, couldn't take his eyes of her. He could still see the trails left by her tears earlier. Now he couldn't forgive himself for making her cry.

M. Well, he just ate. And he ate a lot.

***
"We have to go now, mama, papa." Risa said as she hugged her parents.
"Be careful Risa-chan. Visit us again soon." her mom said.
"Take care of my daughter, son." her dad told M.
"Count on me sir." M answered. "Thanks for the meal by the way, ma'am."
"You're such a nice boy." Risa's mom said. "Take care of yourself too, Ai-chan." she said as she hugged her.
"I will." Ai said.
"Bye bye, mama, papa." said Risa as the four stepped out of the house.

After the gate was closed, R was the first one to speak.
"I have to go now. Thanks a lot Gaki-san."
"Aww. Aren't you coming back with us, Retsu-chan?" Risa asked.
"Not today. See you again, Gaki-san, Ai."
"What about me?" M asked.
"Haha. Of course I'll be seeing you again."
"Retsuya..."
"Yes Ai?"
"I'm sorry about before."
"Don't worry. I already forgave you a long time ago. I hope you'll forgive me for the things I've said. See you." R said as he walked away.
"What was that about, Ai-chan?"
"Just a misunderstanding Gaki-san." Ai said as he watched R walk away.
"Alright girls, let's go. What the?" M said as he saw a scratch on the car. "He's going to kill me!'
"What is it Michii-kun?" Risa asked him.
"Ah. It's just a small scratch. They won't notice it. Let's get going."
"Okay."
"I hope I can pull of an Edward Elric to take care of the scratch or else I'm done for."M said to himself.

***
R was a few blocks away when someone appeared in front of him.
"So, are you going to help me?" asked the mysterious figure as he ate some of his potato chips.
"I don't have to do anything with you."
"Really? Alright, so it's going to be partially your fault if something happens to the girls." he said as he started to walk away.
"If you ever touch Ai I'm going to kill you!"
"My my. But you already touched her didn't you?"
R ran towards the mysterious man and unleashed a Hokuto Hyakuretsu Ken. Amazingly, the mysterious man was able to evade all 99 punches and caught R's hand during the last punch.
"It's either you're with me or against me!" he said as he punched R's stomach. R fell on his knees. Then the man elbowed R's face before kicking him. He saw that his chips were already scattered on the floor. "Look at what you've done. You wasted my chips. Fist of the North Star? Hah!" the man said as he walked away.
R got back on his feet and performed a Tatsu Maki Senpuu Kyaku but the man caught his leg and slammed him on the pavement.
"If you continue you're going to die today."
R was already bloodied but he stood up once again and using whatever strength he had left, a 114 Shiki Aragami, 128 Shiki Kono Kizu,127 Shiki Yano Sabi combo, only to be countered by an Oniyaki. The mysterious man looked at R as he lay on the street.
"Alright, I'll be a sport. I'll let you hit me now." the man said as he squatted in front of R. But R couldn't stand, he couldn't even sit up. He couldn't move his body. But he could speak.
"Go to hell!"
"I've been there but they threw me out. I'll let you live for now, in case you change your mind. Remember, some boys touch! Hahahaha!"
R closed his eyes as he listened to the man laughing as he walked away.
Tears mixed with his blood.

"Ai..."

That was the only thing he could say as he looked up to the sky...



"Mommy, mommy! Look!....."

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« Reply #49 on: November 10, 2006, 12:10:10 PM »
The little girl and her mom are hella funny! And oh boy, cosplayers? :lol:

The part about "some boys touch" was priceless XD

Please don't let anything happen to Ai or the other girls.... NOT. It wouldn't be interesting then :p

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« Reply #50 on: November 10, 2006, 05:55:32 PM »
Lol, thief! You totally stole the little girl and her mother from Loser87's story.

Ai and R... I could make a joke, but I think everyone would be disgusted...

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« Reply #51 on: November 10, 2006, 09:32:46 PM »
Yay update!
Love the mysterious cliffhanger type thing.  Big baddie coming up ey ^^v
Cant wait for next one :D

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« Reply #52 on: November 10, 2006, 10:01:37 PM »
oh man...that was just......*speechless*....

and the "I look better than you, admit it!" part was rofl

but the Ai-chan R moment was the best, damn u R....

(performs Kamen Rider Stronger Henshin sequence "Henshin....Suturonga!" to protect Ai-chan and say the memorable lines "Heaven. Earth. They all called for me, the man of justice. So beware villains, for I am Kamen Rider Stronger!)

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« Reply #53 on: November 11, 2006, 01:41:47 AM »
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Lol, thief! You totally stole the little girl and her mother from Loser87's story.

I didn't steal them. I asked permission from her if I could use them and she agreed :ONhee:

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« Reply #54 on: November 11, 2006, 02:01:56 AM »
YATTA~~NEW CHAPTER~~

:ROTFLMAO: COSPLAYERS?!

oh wow...tension between Takahashi and R gets solved so quickly o.O

LOL @ car's scratch! :lol: say good bye to your parts M XD

:ONshock: BAD GUY?! so...who was the one that made the hole at the docks?! i thought it was R before...but now i'm not so sure...

"some boys touch"?! does that mean Maki's gonna be a target?!!?

:ONpleeease: post up the next chapter quick...need to know the answers to my questions...pleeeeeeeeasseeeeee? :baa60776:

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« Reply #55 on: November 11, 2006, 05:06:41 AM »
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Lol, thief! You totally stole the little girl and her mother from Loser87's story.


Hitomi and her mom wasn't stolen XDXD
Wordsworth did indeedy ask for permission to use them
and I agreed :)

Ah your chapter was funny and cute once again you impress me with your way of words :ONluvluv2: :ONluvluv2: :ONluvluv2:

Back to my dungeon where I am locked up with a typewriter, visit the God Of Cheesecake and you shall recieve!!! nothing...because this god would be sleeping XDXDXD

Ah post new chapters soon!! pleeaaasssee!!:baa60776: :baa60776:
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« Reply #56 on: November 16, 2006, 11:00:04 AM »
We start this chapter with another character.

It was the parking lot of an amusement park. It was late so there where no other people around. The dim streetlights were the only source of light for the area. Wild fans surrounded D.
"One, two, three, four, five. Five against one. Fair enough." he said.
The wild fans circled him, like eagles preparing to swoop in for the kill. D hopped, like he was using a jump rope. The moment the wild fans attacked, D vanished. But he didn't run away. Then the wild fans looked for him but suddenly a blur passed them then they found themselves in the air...

***
In the Guardians' quarters...

"Hey K, I have a question for you." M said.
"Sure. You can ask me anything."
"Anything?"
"Wait. You can ask me any question except anything that has to do with the kids."
"Deal."
"Go ahead, ask your question."
"I've been thinking about this for a long time..." M sat down on the couch and looked like Ikari Gendo with his hands together in front of his face.
"Go on."
"Is D really a guy?"
K didn't answer immediately. Perhaps he was surprised with the question or he was trying to control himself from laughing. He wasn't sure if M was serious so he tried to be serious as well.
"Of course he is. Why'd you ask?"
"Because I feel uncomfortable when I see him coming from the comfort room."
"Huh? I don't get it."
"I hesitate going to the comfort room after him, because I'm not sure if it's the one for guys. Seeing someone like him walk out of the men's room creeps me out. But hey, maybe I can make it an excuse to walk inside the ladies room. Oh, I thought this was the men's room! Hehehe."
"You and your perverted ways. It seems like his looks make you insecure."
"Me? Insecure? Why should I? Oh yeah, I already met R and I look better! Nyaa~!!!"
"Haha. I don't care. You know what, D wasn't really like that before. He was clumsy, and geeky. Imagine S with a bad hair day, only D was worse. But then he changed."
"What happened?"
"I dunno."
"Maybe he did get rid of his nuts!"

***
D looked at the wild fans in the air.
"Now which of them should I deal with first...Forget it..." he said as he jumped and vanished again...

D attacked his first target. He landed a couple of kicks and finished with an axe kick, similar to the finisher of the Naruto Rendan, which sent the unconscious wild fan crashing to the ground. He switched to the next two and circled around them, creating illusions of himself, similar to Aoshi's Flowing Water Technique. The wild fans attacked the illusions but they realized that they were fooled when they were sent down to the ground by a vicious kick.
"Three down, two to go!"

***
What really happened…

When D was starting, he had wavy, unmanageable hair, which covered his face, and he looked like a sickly person. He was always sulking. He didn't have any self-confidence. He could finish his assignments but he was usually the butt of jokes of the others.
"I don't know why Michishige-san was assigned to you. You two are like extreme opposites."
"You need a haircut, D! Birds might someday decide to live on your head!"
"Looks like the wild fan didn't give you a hard time. Maybe when he saw you he voluntarily surrendered!"
Those were some of the things they would say to him. D would just smile and appear unaffected but inside he was hurt even if he knows that they were just joking.
He would usually go to the rooftop to feel better but one day...

"Michishige-san? What are you doing here?"
"You're Domon, right?" Sayumi asked as she wiped away tears from her eyes.
"Just call me Domo-kun."
"Okay."
"You were crying."
"Yeah. I had problems with the rehearsals today. The instructor said some mean things to me."
"I see. But words can't really hurt you can they?"
"I know. But sometimes some of those words make me want to give up."
"How true."
"They make fun of you too, don't they?"
"How'd you know?"
"We're the same."
"I can understand why they make fun of me but you? I don get it. How can they make fun of someone like you?"
"Well, they say I'm chubby and I don't know how to sing and I'm lousy at dancing."
"Ouch. Those are bad things to say but I know that they're not true."
"Actually, I believe some of them are."
"But if they say that, how come you always look happy?"
"Ishikawa-senpai taught me to stay positive. If I let those words affect me, I won't progress."
"Really?"
"It works. Try it."
"I don't know..."
"Come on. Tell me something that makes you unhappy."
"Okay. They say I'm ugly."
Sayumi brushed his hair aside and placed her hands on D's face then looked at him. D blushed and tried to get away from her glare.
"No you're not! You're cute!"
"You're just saying that."
"No! You're really cute! Let's go to my room, I have just the stuff!" Sayumi said as he grabbed his arm.
"You're room?"
"We're going to do something I used to do with Reina-chan and Eririn. I haven't done it with guys though."
"What is that?" D said as his face turned red again.
"You'll see..." Sayumi said the giggled.

***
"I'm curious. What kind of fighting moves does D have, K?"
"Finally you ask me a good question. He uses kicks."
"Kicks?"
"Hwoarang, Sanji, Kim Kaphwan, Jet Li, Tony Jaa, Jacky Chan, Bruce Lee and the like. Oh yeah, and Chuck Norris."
"Kicks? That's too easy. I can do those too."
"But can you do them at Soujiro Seta and Rock Lee's speed. It even looks like he can float in the air."
"You mean...he can do air combos?" M's eyes widened.
"What you can't see will hurt you. A lot. Yeah, he can do air combos. Don't provoke him too much or he might give you a thousand kicks in less than five seconds."
"Noted. I'll try to be nice to him from now on."
"Have you seen those shoes he wears?"
"Those weird shoes? I haven't seen any of those being sold at stores. What about them?"
"They're custom made so that they won't get destroyed when he uses his speed."
"So he's like Sonic the Hedgehog."
"Kinda. He even asked the boys at the lab to upgrade his legs so that he will able to reach his top speed anytime he wants."
"How come he doesn't use his hands?"
"He rarely uses his hands. When he was new, he used it but now he prefers using his feet."
"He probably uses them for something else. Hehehe."
"He's not like you, M."

***
D approached the fourth one. He gave him a couple of DBZ style kicks and sent him to the ground after. He then looked at the last one.
"You have to be glad because I always save the best one for last."

***
"A makeover?" D wondered.
"Yes."
"I don't think it's a good idea."
"Don't worry. I know it'll turn out great. Hey, your hands are nice." Sayumi said as they walked inside.
"Really?"
"Take care of them, okay?"
"Okay."
When they arrived at Sayumi's room, she took out a chair and asked him to sit down in front of the mirror. Sayumi then took out her tools. Some stuff for the hair, a hair iron, a set of scissors, a tube of facial moisturizer, and other stuff.
"D...don't hurt me." D said.
"I won't hurt you." she said as she started styling his hair.
"Please tell me she's not doing this." D said to himself as he closed his eyes.
After a few more minutes and a few snips with the scissors and a facial..."It's finished." Sayumi said.
D opened his eyes. He couldn't believe it. He couldn't recognize himself in the mirror. His bothersome hair looked a lot better now and he could see his face.
"Didn't I tell you were cute."
"I...is that really me?" D said as he pointed to the mirror.
"Of course it is, silly. Now just put this on your hair when you take a bath to keep it that way." Sayumi said as she handed him a bottle of shampoo or conditioner, whatever.
"I feel...I feel a lot better. I don't know how to thank you, Michishige-san."
"That's easy, just stay positive." she said as she did the Usa-chan peace.
"I will." D said as he mimicked Sayumi's stance.

Eri and Reina entered the room.
"Who's that, Sayu?" Eri asked.
"Don't tell me you can't recognize him too. It's Domo-kun." Sayumi answered.
"It can't be! You mean that's the weird looking guy? You've got to be kiddng!" Reina burst out.
"He doesn't look weird now, does he?"
"I didn't know you were cute, Domo-kun." Eri said.
D stood up. "Thank you, Kamei-san. Now I'm afraid that if I go out now the other guys would get jealous because of my looks."
"That's the spirit!" Sayumi said as he patted him on the back.
"Kyo-kun didn't tell me about this." Reina pouted. " I'd have to bash him next time I see him. You actually look prettier than Sayu-chan."
"That's not true." D said as he looked at Sayumi.
"That's fine. I also have a feeling that she's right." Sayumi said.
"Why don't you try out for the next auditions for Morning Musume, Domo-kun. I'm sure you can make it." Eri said.
"He's a guy, Eririn. Hello?" Reina exclaimed.
"So what? They won't notice."
"Hey! Don't say things like that about Domo-kun!" Sayu pouted.
"Maybe if they have auditions for male members. But I'll have to work on my singing."
"You don't have to. Your looks alone will get you in."
"Haha. Maybe. I have to go now, Michishige-san. Thanks a lot again. See you, Kamei-san, Tanaka-san." he said as he bowed.
"Don't forget these stuff." Sayumi said as she handed him different bottles and sachets. "And don't forget to use them."
"I will."
"Take care of your hands. If you ever feel sad, just look at the mirror and do the Usa-chan peace, okay? From now on, you'll be the official advocate of Usa-chan peace aside from me."
"If you say so." D said as he left the room. He was a few steps away but he could still hear them talking.

"He's really cute, Sayu."
"Hey, where'd my shampoo go? "

***
D dashed towards his last opponent. He unleashed Sanji-style kicks that sent the wild fan spiraling downward. D looked and the enemy was going to hit the ground headfirst. Before the wild fan could hit the ground, D caught him with is left leg.
"That's it for today." D said as he watched the wild fans turn to normal. He took their video camera and then used the memory erasing procedure. After a few minutes, he woke up one of them.
"Where am I, ma'am?"
"Haha. I'm a guy. You guys got wasted."
"No way! I'm sorry about that. I think I'm still wasted."
"No problem. You and your friends should go. It's late. And it looks like you have work tomorrow."
"Oh yeah."
"I'll go ahead." D said as he walked away.

***
"I'm home!" D said as he entered the room.
"What took you so long?" M asked.
"Why do you ask?"
"We were getting worried. Plus your food's already cold."
"Don't worry about me. I can take care of myself."
"Where'd you go anyway?"
"Just spreading Usa-chan peace."
"Yeah right. That's just like dropping golden poop across the city."
« Last Edit: November 17, 2006, 02:45:04 AM by wordsworth »

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Offline rndmnwierd

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« Reply #57 on: November 16, 2006, 07:07:26 PM »
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"Hey, where'd my shampoo go? "

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"Just spreading Usa-chan peace."
"Yeah right. That's just like dropping golden poop across the city."


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The martial arts talk is starting to confuse me though.

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« Reply #58 on: November 16, 2006, 10:38:39 PM »
You know i never thought I'd find toku fans here, but wow, so many references, and its done so comically at times its a great story, keep up the good work.

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« Reply #59 on: November 16, 2006, 11:29:01 PM »
hahaha......so thats how D got his metrosexual looks.....:ONsmoke:
nice chapter since it focuses on other character's developments.....nice1:ONbingo:

but i especially luv The question-meets-situation-meets-answers in flash back style, makes me:

1st, ask the same question:ONglasses:
2nd, see the "question" in action:ONdozing:
3rd, then realize the answer:ONfarofflook:

but the part i luv the most......"like spreding golden poop around the city"....hahahaha:ONxD::ONxD:priceless:ONxD::ONxD:reminds me of poor mikitty doing the "popo~" skits:ONxD::ONxD::ONxD:hahahaha hilarious

ok....now i'm off to spread sum usa-chan love:ONhehehe:

spreading the usa-chan love....i mean darkness(thanks to JFC)

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