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Title: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on August 22, 2008, 09:32:18 AM
hi everyone im a new writer so i dont write that great and this story might sound cheesy and its ishiyoshi


Chapter 1
“Alright class, may I have your attention. We have a transferred student today and her name is Yoshizawa Hitomi. Please be nice to her.” Nakazawa sensei introduced hastily.

“Just call me yossie and the thing I hate the most is annoying people so don’t bug me or ask any silly questions when its not needed.” yossie spoked bluntly.

“Any question class?”

“Ano, why is she wearing pants instead of skirt.” one student questioned and suddenly everyone was whispering.

“Didn’t I just say not to ask silly question and to answer your question its because I HATE skirts!” yossie raised her voice which shut the whole class to silent.

Nakazawa sensei clapped her hands “Ok class settle down, Yossie please take a seat next to Ishikawa Rika, she’s sitting next to the window first row, fourth seat.”
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“Are you detective Yoshizawa Hiromi.”

“Yes and you?

“My name is Akira and I’m a cop”

“What business do I have with you”

“We heard that you’re a talented detective and can break any case without a sweat. In Tokyo, there’s this Ishikawa gang that has been smuggling in illegal cocaine and weapons and they made money through any illegal means.”

“Then just arrest them.”

“Its easy to say that but we don’t have any evidence. Everytime we sent spies, they always end up missing or being killed. So we want you to take this case.”

“Sorry not interested, I only like to solve mysteries.”

“Well if I say that this case is related to your sister’s death.” Hiromi looked up at him. “your sister died in a car accident; however, a witness saw Ishikawa crews in that car so they might be involved with your sister’s death.”

“what do you want me to do.”

“even though Ishikawa Kazuko is a dangerous man, but he has a daughter named Rika and he loves her a lot. She goes to an all school girl named Gakuhou High School. We want you to get close to her and if you have a chance then investigate her father.”

“I’ll accept this case but I don’t want to wear a skirt.“

“Don’t worry about that, we can ask a permission for you to wear pants. By the way change your name to Hitomi to hide your idenity.”

“When’s the mission?”

“Starting tomorrow.”
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So that’s Rika. Behind a scary father there’s a cute daughter. How ironic” yossie thought to herself.

She took a glance at Rika and Rika turned back, happened to see yossie staring at her.

“What?” Rika retorted.

“Nothing.” Yossie quickly turned away. “hm…she’s really cute.”


Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: stefy on August 22, 2008, 11:36:52 AM
Heyy your writing...

Okayy. Nice idea.. but seriously TOOOOO LITTLE DESCRIPTION!!
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: gloopip on August 22, 2008, 01:21:11 PM
ISHIYOSHI!!!! :mon beam:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: strawb3rrykream on August 22, 2008, 04:16:51 PM
Oshit, Ishikawa gang?? XD I like this! :P
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on August 22, 2008, 09:40:48 PM
haha sorry i was typing at around 11pm and i wanted to finish it so i rushed myself, next time ill add more details thanks for your comments though
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: JFC on August 23, 2008, 02:01:06 AM
Heyy your writing...

Okayy. Nice idea.. but seriously TOOOOO LITTLE DESCRIPTION!!
Agreed. Dialogue is nice, but it does need more descriptive context.
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: tru_harmony on August 23, 2008, 02:43:15 AM
yay! more ishiyoshi!!!

gangs and cops, eh...

kinda similar to a fic idea playing in my mind for a while...

hmm... thanks for starting a new fic... more stuff for me to read!
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: maverickpanda on August 23, 2008, 06:09:14 AM
yossie all twenty one jump street is so  :mon bleed2: and :mon mischief:

good start keep at it always good to have fresh content on the forumn
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on August 23, 2008, 10:56:45 AM
sorry for my bad writing  :banghead:  this chapter i dont know if its descriptive enough

Chapter 2

“Yoshizawa, wake up!” Nakazawa sensei threw a chalk straight at her face and luckily she dodged it. “hmph, you were lucky but this time I guess not.” She had two chalk erasers in her hands and aimed really hard this time which totally struck yossie’s face.

“Itai.” Yossie complained. Her cheeks were covered with chalk powdered which made her became the class clown and the whole class was laughing. “Sensei why don’t you become a karate master instead of a teacher.” Yossie said chokingly while laughing.

“How dare you on your first day to fall asleep in class and even talked back to me. I guess you have some guts Yoshizawa. No one in this school is dare enough to confront me except you.” Nakazawa sensei crackled her knuckles which made yossie gulped down her saliva.

Ding dong ding dong

“Alright class dismiss.” Yossie was the first person to storm out of the class room immediately. “However Yoshizawa I need to …..eh where is she?”

“Phew. Lucky its lunch time. Even though my karate is beyond a black belt but I wouldn’t want to face her wrath. Dang her glare really scared the shit out of me.” Yossie walked into the bathroom to clean her face and most of the girls stared at her with amusement as she entered.

“Eh? Never seen a handsome girl?” Yossie gave an annoyed look.

“Who is this girl. I’ve never seen her before. Maybe she’s a transferred student but she‘s really handsome and she has pants too.” The girls started whispering to each other. Normally Yossie hate it when someone whispering about her but since they commented on her handsome look, she let it slide this time.

After she finished cleaning her face. She went to buy some food for lunch. As she was walking in the hallway, she approached Rika and her two crews. Rika walking in the middle while the two followers pushed way for Rika. One of the crews pushed a girl really hard which sent her down to the floor and started kicking her.

“Out of the way! Cant you see Rika-sama is here. Idiot.”

“Yui, that’s should be enough.” the other crew stopped her friend.

“Erika, we have to teach these idiots a lesson not to get in Rika-sama’s way.” she continued kicking and stepping on the poor girl’s hand.

Yui was about to punch the girl but Yossie caught her punch with her left hand and with her right arm, she grabbed Yui’s arm and threw her over Yossie’s shoulder with her back landing on the solid ground. Erika ran to Yui’s side to help her get up. Everyone in the hallway froze in their place because this is the first time that someone stopped Rika’s crews

Yossie walked up to face Rika. “Even though you have a pretty face but deep down inside is rotten. Who do you think you are making everyone to get out of your way!”

“Who am I is none of your business. Even my father wouldn’t dare to lecture me that.” Rika gave Yossie a smirk while staring straight into her eyes

Couldn’t control her anger anymore, Yossie slapped Rika’s face on her right cheek which made hers swollen. “Then ill teach you in place of your father. I don’t give a damn about your father spoiled you but if you bully people then ill stick my nose in it.” Yossie’s anger is boiling up but she softened as she saw Rika’s eyes started to have some tears.

“How dare you slap Rika-sama” Yui and Erika both shouted. They ran to Rika to examine her cheek

“Let’s go.” Rika insisted.

“But she…” Yui had a confused face

“I said let’s go!” Rika interrupted and walked away. The two soon sped their speed to catch up with Rika.

“Are you ok?” Yossie stated.

“Yeah.” the girl answered. Yossie helped her get up and brushed away the dust on her skirt.

“Really next time you should stand up against them. Bullies are coward once you fight against them.”

“It’s ok. I’m used to it. She has a strong father behind. No one dares to slap her like that.”

“Except me.” the girl nodded.

“Are you a transferred student.” she then examined yossie’s pants.

“Yeah.”

“That’s why you didn’t know about Rika’s strong background. Avoid her next time when you see her. I’m going back to my classroom. Thank you for saving me and Im sorry for putting you in danger. She might not leave you alone.”

“Don’t worry about that and remember to treat your injuries.” she smiled and left yossie in the hallway. Yossie watched her leaving and scanned the hallway. “Wow, when did everyone leave so fast. Just then I saw a crowd and now there’s no single soul here well except my soul.”

Ding dong ding dong

“Eh, lunch time is over? Time sure passes really fast.” yossie’s stomach let out a noise and she grabbed her tummy. “hm..lucky I still have a jolly rancher.”


Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: tru_harmony on August 23, 2008, 04:04:06 PM
this is soooooo from sukeban deka codename: asamiya saki!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

bitchy rika is HOTTT and damn SEXXXY...

hmmm... yossui... better teach the girl a lesson...

... keep at it... your story has potential!!!

thanks for the update~~ looking forward to the next one...
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: kRisZ on August 23, 2008, 05:07:10 PM
 :muffin:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: strawb3rrykream on August 23, 2008, 05:47:22 PM
I agree with tru, this is definitely Rika's character: Akiyama Reika from Sukeban Deka!!!
But I love it! So hot~ :drool: So whose this girl that Yossy saved???
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on August 23, 2008, 09:50:49 PM
haha yeah, after i watched yoyo girl cop, i realized bitchy rika is super hot so i want to incorporate that into my fanfic

hm..about the girl that yossie saved? i dont even know, i just wrote whatever came into my mind

ill try to update one chapter a day if i can before skool starts
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: JFC on August 23, 2008, 11:42:40 PM
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yossie’s stomach let out a noise and she grabbed her tummy. “hm..lucky I still have a jolly rancher.”
XD
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: hotohori on August 24, 2008, 12:33:17 AM
 :mon mischief: I like your story  :mon inluv:

Yossie is really kakkoi  :mon lovelaff:

keep your work up  :mon thumb:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on August 24, 2008, 10:59:25 AM
i hope you guys like the story build up

Chapter3.

Yossie decided to skip half remaining class because first she didn’t want to hear Nakazawa sensei’s lecturing nor see Rika. So she ditched school and went home early.

She arrived at her house and received a welcome from her best friend also known as her assistant in detective busniness.

“You’re home early.” she said but Yossie kept walking to her bedroom and threw her backpack on the floor and let herself fall down on her bed.

“I screwed up on my mission a little bit.” yossie eyes closed.

“Uso, who would have thought a professional like you made a mistake.” her friend chuckled a little. She sat beside her bed. Yossie looked at Goto waiting for her to let yossie speak.

“So what did you do.” Goto recomposed herself and tried to listen to her friend.

“I slapped my target. I was supposed to get close to her but now after this I think it’ll be hard to approach her.”

Goto stood up to put away yossie’s backpack. “Its rare to see you lose your coolness. Something must have pushed your anger button.”

“I guess so. By the way I need you to do my school homework.”

“Eh why, its not my job and plus Im already occupied with other jobs in place of you. Why do you care so much about homework when you’re not a real school girl.”

“It’s because my class has a devil teacher who likes to suck student’s soul whom doesn’t do their homework.” yossie lowered her voice to sound more creepy which sent shiver up Goto’s spine.

Ringgggggggggggsss

“I’ll go pick up the call and make coffee for you.” Goto left yossie’s room and closed the door. Yossie stood up and walked to look at the window.

“Anger button?” yossie talked to herself. “Maybe she reminded me of her.”

Flashback

“onee-san save me” the girl was sobbing while running into the older girl’s arms.

“Emiko, what happened.” she looked concern.

“those girls bullied me again.” Four girls ran toward Emiko but was stopped by the older girl.

“You bastard! How dare you picked on my little precious sister.” she then punched the four girls in the face. Blood dripped from their mouths and in an instant they sprinted away as fast as they could while screaming.

“Don’t worry Emiko, they’re gone so stop crying. Onee-san will always be there to protect you
.”

“Emiko, your older sister is useless. I wasn’t there to save you from your tragic death.” Yossie wiped away her tears immediately as soon as Goto entered with a cup of coffee in her hand.

“Thinking of her again.” she place the coffee on the table.

Yossie nodded and took the coffee to drink. “What was that call for.”

“Some random client asked to find a lost dog so I refused since I know you’re really busy.”

“Thanks for everything you did and your support.”

“Don’t say that, I want to bear your burdens for you as your best friend. I was surprised that you decided to become a detective after your sister’s sudden death.”

Yossie didn’t say anything. She just stared at the window while sipping her coffee. Her friend knew that she was in a deep thinking again so she let silence consumed the room.

____________________________________________

Rika and her crews left the school building when school was over. They were all quiet until Yui broke the silence.

“Rika-sama, we should do something about that new girl. I couldn’t believe that she had a gut to slap you.”

Erika added something in. “We can hire someone to give her 10 times the pain that she inflicted on you.”

Rika spotted her driver in front of the school gate and stopped on her track. “I don’t recall that I said I wanted to get her back. In addition, don’t ever lay a finger on her.” she emphasized her last sentence and entered her car. The two crews’ minds were completely blank not knowing why Rika wouldn’t do anything about it.






Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: hotohori on August 24, 2008, 01:25:41 PM
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“I don’t recall that I said I wanted to get her back. In addition, don’t ever lay a finger on her.” she emphasized her last sentence and entered her car.


I bet she´s already interested in Yossie  :hiakhiakhiak:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: tru_harmony on August 24, 2008, 01:30:21 PM
woo~~~

GAWD, I FEEL LIKE STARTING A NEW FIC...

... i bet rika thinks she's the only one who's allowed to 'lay a finger' on yossui!!!!
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: wings4dreams on August 24, 2008, 02:30:58 PM
yaaaaay!  ishiyoshi!!!!  :muffin:  I've only read the first part so far and I'm really liking this one.

I'll come back to read the rest a little later and leave a better comment then. I just wanted to let you know that i like it  :on GJ:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: kRisZ on August 25, 2008, 06:30:51 AM
no one's allowed to mess with yossie but me <- Rika  :wahaha:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on August 25, 2008, 10:40:59 AM
thanks for everyone comment, hearing that you guys like this story makes me happy
@ tru_harmony, ill support you if you start a new fic, i cant get enough of ishiyoshi.

Chapter 4

The driver stopped infront of Ishikawa’s mansion. The gate was open and two lines of maids were standing on the sidelide welcoming their miss Rika home. Rika smiled and strolled down to the mansion’s door. Her dad was reading newspaper in the living room and he looked up as soon as Rika walked in.

“You’re back my daughter.” Mr. Kazuko always seemed happy everytime he sees his daughter but his smiling lips dropped down into a frown. “What happened to your cheek? Did someone hurt you my daughter? Tell me, I’ll make sure that person will never see sunlight again.”

“Otousan, please don’t use your power to threaten people. You know I don’t like it. No one hurt me, I was clumsy so I got myself hurt.” Rika sat beside her dad.

“Alright alright it is as you wish but we should treat your swollen cheek. I’ll order about twenty doctors…”

“Father I’m alright, its just a little bit red. I don’t need doctors.” Rika cut him off right away. “I want to take a rest, please excuse me.” She moved up the stairway and into her room.

Mr. Kazuko scratched his head. “Maybe 20 doctors isn’t enough.”

Rika’s room was really special and was the only room that stood out the most. It was covered all in pink, carpet, bed, chair and ect..

She stood infront of the mirror and observed her right cheek. “So this is your greeting to me after many years we finally met again. Hiromi-chan.” she grabbed her necklace and stared at it passionately.
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“Achooooo!!” Yossie sneezed really loud and her nose became watery. She reached for tissue and wiped her nose roughly. “Someone must be talking about me.”

“Maybe your enemies.” Goto was working on Yossie’s homework. Her forehead frowned alittle when it came to hard problems.

“So how’s the homework.” Yossie was punching the sandbag in her room, revealing her sexy muscles on her arms. Her sweats were gliding down her cheeks but she doesn’t feel any tired.

“Thanks to you, it gives me more wrinkles on my forehead.” she sratched her hair with a pencil. Yossie stopped her boxing and wiped away her sweats. She took a rest to catch up her breath. “I always wonder who gave you that necklace. It seems like it’s a treasure to you.”

“This?” Yossie pointed to her necklace. Goto nodded.. “I bought this with my childhood friend, Riko.”

“Really, how did you know her.” Goto stopped her writing and listened attentively.

“You know how I liked to go to the park and play soccer back then. I met her there when I was thirteen and she was twelve. We started to become friends because we both like to play soccer. Soon we were close friends but I don’t really know much about her background and vice versa. One day we wanted to buy souvenirs so we bought two necklaces. One necklace has a key face and the other has a lock face and we asked the seller to engrave *forever* on the lock face and *together* on the key. I chose a lock face because it looks manly.”

“How romantic, were you in love with her?”

Yossie was quiet for like 7 seconds.”mhmm, that’s why we engraved forever together because no matter what we’ll always be together.”

“But how come..” Yossie knew what Goto was going to ask so she replied.

“Because after my sister’s death, I was too shocked so I shut everything out of my mind. I only wanted to focus on finding out who was the culprit. After that incident I stopped seeing her and moved to Tokyo to study in order to become a detective.”

“And you met me. Would you be back with her if you see her again?”

“Who knows, she might be in love with someone else already. If we are destined to be together, fate will let us meet again.” Yossie resumed her boxing activity. “Anyway back to work lousy girl. I should charge you money for asking too many questions.”

Goto shot a pencil at Yossie’s head. “then I should charge you for making me do your homework.”
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: tru_harmony on August 25, 2008, 11:40:16 AM
i smell... roses in the air...

man... is there an ishiyoshi brainwave going around?

... those are not typos, right?

man o man o man o man.......

thanks for the update and the support!!!! GO ISHIYOSHI!
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: hotohori on August 25, 2008, 12:00:32 PM
~kya how sweet matching necklaces  :luvluv2:

ishiyoshi  :luvluv1:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on August 27, 2008, 05:49:18 PM
Chapter 5

The next day at school, yossie got yelled from Nakazawa sensei for ditching school and being late to school. She spared her life this time because Yossie did her homework .

Thanks Goto. You save my life. Yossie fidgeted a pencil between her index finger and her thumb, ignoring Nakazawa sensei lecturing a math lesson. Rika seemed to take several glances at Yossie and her lips curved up.

“Yoshizawa, it seems that this class isn’t the type to entertain you right?” Nakazawa sensei had her back talking to Yossie while continuing writing. “Can I have you solve this math problem. What’s 2+1?”

“0.” the class was cracking up and Nakazawa sensei stared at her with a weird look. Rika turned to look at Yossie waiting for her explanation.

“Why is it zero?” one student asked while holding her stomach.

“Well, when one person falls in love with two people, since he/she cant decide who to be with, so he/she ends up with no one. Having no one at the end, isn’t that zero?” Yossie replied coherently.

No doubt that she is Hiromi-chan. Only she and I know about this theory.” Rika thought to herself with her chin rested on her palms.

“I really like your theory but this is a math class, not philosophy class so please don’t give any meaningless answer. Everyone concentrate now!” Nakazawa sensei demanded.

School was finally over and Yossie strolled down to the gate but stopped when she saw a familiar figure standing there. The figure saw yossie started to approach closer to her.

“I’ve been waiting for you Yossie.” Rika grinned.

“You want to take revenge from yesterday?” Yossie put her hands in her pants’ pockets to make a cool pose.

“Nope, I want you to go shopping with me.” Rika didn’t give Yossie a second to react knowing that Yossie might protest. She immediately grabbed yossie’s arm and pulled her into the car. “Drive me to a mall.” She ordered her driver.

“What the? This is nothing but kidnapping. You can let go of my arm you know.”

“Oh.” Rika let go of yossie’s arm and looked down embarrassedly.

The car arrived at a mall and the two walked into a store that sells dresses and suit. The cashier bowed to Rika and Yosie. Rika then tried on the dresses and most of them were pink, leaving yossie standing there waiting for her. Yossie tapped her foot on the floor, hoping that rika will finish soon.

“If it wasn’t because of my duty, I would have left you already.” Yossie talked quietly to herself. A couple of girls passed by Yossie and they stopped, exchanging a few words with her.

“Wow, you’re so handsome. What’s your name and how old are you……?” They kept on bombarding questions at yossie but yossie just ignored them sicne she hate annoying people.

“If you guys don’t get away from her, ill make you guys regret for this.” Rika with her arms fold, shot them a death glare which sent them away. Yossie stared at rika with amusement. “what are some annoying brats.”

“Are you done choosing a dress and why do you need one suddenly.”

“Because tomorrow is my eighteenth birthday.” Rika held a pink dress infront of her and examined herself in a mirror. She turned left and right and spinned around.

"Geez most of the stuffs she chose were pink. I wonder if her panties are pink too". Yossie smirked to herself. She then came up with a plan. She pretended to drop her key and bent down to pick it up. She took peek under Rika’s skirt. Ha! Just as I expected, it’s pink. What’s wrong with girls these day.

Rika caught Yossie looking under her skirt in the mirror. “I guess you’re all talk on the outside but deep down inside you’re just a pervert.” Yossied denied and looked away shamefully.

“Alright I’m done with my dress, now let’s look a suit for you.”

“Why do I need to buy one.”

“Because you’re invited to my party .” Rika grabbed a suit and put it infront of Yossie then she took another one to compare.

Yossie didn’t refuse to go to rika’s party since this is her chance to go to her house and maybe she could sneak into her father’s room.

“Here try this one.” Rika acted like she was Yossie’s girlfriend. Yossie put on a nice fabric black suit. “You’re so cool.” Rika’s mouth seemed like drooling.

The two went to pay their clothes. Rika wanted to pay for Yossie’s suit but she refused.

“Sorry,I don’t use girl’s money.” Yossie quickly stopped Rika. “How much is it.” Yossie asked the seller.

“Your suit costs 39,000 yen.” She took out her wallet and handed the cash to the cashier. "Darn why did she choose an expensive one.

While yossie was paying her clothes, Rika was mesmerizing about her childhood past.

These necklaces will be around 2,000 including the engraving.

“Hiromi, let me help you pay half of the price.”

“No Riko, gentlemen don’t let girls pay and I don’t like using girl’s money. This is a gift from me to you so let me pay.” Riko didn’t say anything and obeyed her friend’s words.

“So many years and you’re still like that. Acting as a gentleman, a stubborn one also
.” Rika talked in her mind.

“Hey?” Yossie waved her hand infront of Rika’s face. “Are you daydreaming? I’m done with my payment.” Rika blinked her eyes and came back to reality. “What time does the party start?”
“At six pm.”

“Anyway I’m done. I’m going home. See ya.”

“Wait I need to give you a ride back since I brought you here.”

“It’s ok. I don’t want to give you any trouble. Actually you’re troubling me. I would have been at home resting right now if you didn’t kidnap me.” Rika watched yossie’s back disappearing behind the door.



Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: hotohori on August 27, 2008, 09:21:55 PM
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"Geez most of the stuffs she chose were pink. I wonder if her panties are pink too". Yossie smirked to herself. She then came up with a plan. She pretended to drop her key and bent down to pick it up. She took peek under Rika’s skirt. Ha! Just as I expected, it’s pink.

~kya Yossie you pervert :shy2:

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Yossie put on a nice fabric black suit. “You’re so cool.” Rika’s mouth seemed like drooling.

me too  :wriggly:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: JFC on August 28, 2008, 03:22:08 AM
Man, Yossi's gonna PLOTZ when she realizes that Rika is her childhood friend. ;D
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: kRisZ on August 30, 2008, 06:53:22 PM
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"Geez most of the stuffs she chose were pink. I wonder if her panties are pink too". Yossie smirked to herself. She then came up with a plan. She pretended to drop her key and bent down to pick it up. She took peek under Rika’s skirt. Ha! Just as I expected, it’s pink. What’s wrong with girls these day.

 :rofl:  :rofl:  :rofl:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: strawb3rrykream on August 31, 2008, 05:23:53 PM
Didn't realized I missed so much! Yossy's little sister died... :cry: Does Yossy recognize Rika or not? Whatta perv! XD
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on August 31, 2008, 11:56:40 PM
nope, yossie doesnt recognize rika, but rika did. when yossie slapped rika, she saw her dangling necklace that's why rika is being nice to yossie
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: strawb3rrykream on September 01, 2008, 05:16:28 AM
Ok, just wanted to make sure! But I'm definitely looking forward to more of this! :yep:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: stefy on September 01, 2008, 07:59:22 AM
nope, yossie doesnt recognize rika, but rika did. when yossie slapped rika, she saw her dangling necklace that's why rika is being nice to yossie

You should add those point of details in ur fics. so people won't get confused!
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on September 01, 2008, 09:44:51 AM
@ stefy, im planning to do that later in my fic,

i did give a hint that rika recognized yossie as hiromi in chapter 4

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She stood infront of the mirror and observed her right cheek. “So this is your greeting to me after many years we finally met again. Hiromi-chan.” she grabbed her necklace and stared at it passionately.

btw did you get through your problem in school, i hope you did and have more time to write, i really enjoy your stories and look forward to your update
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: zay05ohayou on September 03, 2008, 04:22:19 PM
oooh interesting. childhood friends? Hiromi and Riko? Thats  XD
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: firemore on September 04, 2008, 12:16:30 AM

Chapter 6

Ishikawa’s Resident

The maids were busy preparing food and set up table clothes for the two long tables. Some running back and forth to lay out food and drinks on the tables. Other maids were decorating windows and door frames. There were pink roses in each corners of the mansion. Three chefs were carefully working on a 3 layers cake and Rika’s name was written orderly in pink, any mistake could get them fired.

Rika sat infront of the dresser and started applying make up on her face. She drew eyeliners on her two twinkling eyes and darkened her eyebrows only to look perfect today for that special person in her heart. She removed her key necklace and put it in her jewelry box on the dresser. I don’t want her to know that I’m Riko. I hate the Riko myself back then because maybe that’s why you left me many years ago. Why did you leave me? You hated my old self right? Because of that I changed my name. I want to use Rika as myself today to start another relationship with you, to rebuild what we have lost. I wont let you slip away from my life again. Rika closed her eyes and swallowed hard.

“This is the first time she’s going to be here to celebrate my birthday.” Rika lightened up a bit. “I want her to only see me as the beauty in her eyes only, no other girls can attract her as much as I do.” Rika squealed to herself and winked her right eye.

It was six o’clock pm and the guests started reaching the entrance and soon the mansion was filled up with people. Rika received expensive gifts such as car, brand watches, necklaces and etc.. but none of those made her cheer up until she saw a similar figure arriving.

“Yossie…wait who is that girl next to her and why are they linking arms together.” Rika felt disappointed.  Yossie and Goto walked up to Rika and delivered a happy birthday greeting. Yossie gave rika a wrapped rectangular box gift. A smile appeared on Rika’s face as she took the gift away from Yossie’s hand.

But Rika kept glaring at Goto who dodged her eyes away from Rika’s glare.

hehe, the atmosphere here is really dangerous. Yossie is too densed to see that. If I stay here another sec. I don’t think I can walk out of here safely. Goto made an excuse to use a bathroom and let go of Yossie’s arm. She followed a maid upstairs who led the way for her to the bathroom.

As soon as she was gone, Rika conversed with yossie and  complimented Yossie’s suit. Yossie bowed her head to say thank you

“Who was that girl?” Rika’s tone became irritated

Yossie looked at the direction where Goto was gone. “Oh, she’s Goto, my best friend.”

Their conversation was cut in by Rika’s father who wanted to introduce Rika to his friend and his friend’s son.

“This is Mr. Hiroki Yamamoto and this is his son Kaito Yamamoto .” Rika made a bow to both men but never took a look at Kaito. Kaito looked a bit shy and he usually looked down to avoid looking at Rika.

Rika’s father and Hiroki left them to have their own conversation. However the two just stayed quiet, not knowing what to say nor Rika had any interest in chatting with him

Goto returned from her destination and approached to Yossie. “Rika’s father’s office room is upstair, the third one on the left wall.” she whispered into Yossie’s ear.

Yossie began her mission and sneaked into his office. She sat down on the chair and start typing his computer. But she struggled with the tight security password.

“Shit, it failed again.” Yossie’s phone vibrated and she picked up the call.

“Yossie hurry, Rika’s father and another man are heading upstairs right now.” Yossie hung up and quickly turned off the computer. She managed to place a bug under the desk.

When Yossie opened the door, she heard footsteps near the hallway, without thinking she sped to take refuge in another room on the right wall. Her eyes almost burst out of what she saw infront of her.

“Holy, this whole room is pink. Disgusting. I bet this is Rika’s room.” Yossie scanned around the room and came up to the dresser. She picked up the jewelry box and was about to open it but she felt vibration in her pocket again.

“Where are you Yossie?”

“I think I’m in Rika’s room.” she placed the box back to its current position.

“How was the mission”

“Failed, but I managed to place a bug in his office.”

“Well hurry down here, Rika’s been looking for you. You don’t want to get suspicious for being missing so hurry. The atmosphere here is really stiffed.”

Yossie closed her phone and stuffed it into her pocket. She carefully opened the door lightly and tiptoed across his room. When she came down the stairs, she saw Rika with Kaito.

As soon as Yossie was in the living room, Rika sprinted to her side and left the spacing Kaito to himself.

“Where were you?”

“I was using the bathroom and I kinda got lost, so yeah” Yossie chuckled. "you and that guy look like a perfect match."

Rika became annoyed with Yossie's words. "Compare him to you, you're much better." she talked under her breath so that Yossie couldn't hear her.

“Imma go outside to take fresh air.”

Yossie didn’t know that Rika followed her outside until she turned around. “You want to take fresh air too?

Rika nodded. They sat down on a bench and stared at the sky. Rika was still holding onto Yossie’s gift.

“Why not open it now?”

Rika cautiously removed the wrapping paper not wanting to damage her gift. It was a blue scarf. She touched the scarf to feel the smooth fabric. Yossie grabbed the scarf and wrapped it around Rika’s neck

“It’s chilled out here, you should take care of your health. I cant afford to have you sick.” Rika stared at Yossie’s face and smiled.

“Thanks, ill treasure this gift.”

How come her smile is familiar. Yossie’s look had a confusion.

A maid ran outside and called out Rika that it was time to cut the cake so they reluctantly went inside, leaving the warm bench exposing to the frilly air.
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: JFC on September 04, 2008, 12:30:03 AM
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I don’t want her to know that I’m Riko. I hate the Riko myself back then because maybe that’s why you left me many years ago. Why did you leave me? You hated my old self right? Because of that I changed my name. I want to use Rika as myself today to start another relationship with you, to rebuild what we have lost. I wont let you slip away from my life again.
Well, well, well...that puts a bit of an interesting twist on things...especially if/when Rika finds out what Yossi was really doing and/or what her true purpose was for befriending her at all.
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: maverickpanda on September 04, 2008, 03:55:12 AM
Hurray! Another fic in the ishiyoshi book. I love it.  Cant wait to see how Yossi reacts when she realizes Rika is Riko.  I definetly thought that when Yossi was in Rika's room, she would find the necklace.  So many twists, keep up the good work.
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: hotohori on September 05, 2008, 11:38:29 PM
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But Rika kept glaring at Goto who dodged her eyes away from Rika’s glare.

a jealous Rika :stoned: ... kowai~ :on lol:
Title: Re: unconditional love
Post by: kRisZ on September 06, 2008, 06:03:04 PM
hmmm... *waits for the next update*