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The Hello! Project Fanfics => H!P Fanfics => Topic started by: Joyo-Girl on December 28, 2008, 02:21:01 AM
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A/N; This would be my second fanfic here. My first died quickly because I ran out of ideas and the first couple of chapters were forced, meaning I couldn't continue at all. Prepare yourself for a VAMPIRE fic. It's also not your conventional vampire fic so suspend lots of disbelief and ask me about anything if I don't make it clear enough.
I can't promise you that I'll finish this but I've got enough ideas and motivation to hopefully get quite far.
started: 27/12/08
updated: 10/03/09
ended: Officially restarted as The Red Heart
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Eri never walked alone at night. What possessed her to do so that day no-one would ever really know. It was cold, drizzling slightly and a thick mist hung low in every direction - it also happened to be the longest night of the whole year. All in all, hardly the perfect day to go gallavanting about the streets.
A breeze ran through the narrow alleyway that Eri was forced to take if she wanted to get home on time. On reflex more than actually feeling cold, she pulled her coat around herself to counter the strong shiver making its way up and down her spine. Eri hoisted the hood attached over her head to keep the rain off and, trying to lighten her mood slightly, pulled her silver iPod out of her pocket.
The attempt proved feeble as the second the earphones were in and the device switched on, she lost interest completely and had wound the cable around the iPod and put it back in her pocket. She hoped to have more luck with her cell phone.
'Maybe I could text someone.' She thought dully, remembering that she had actually never used the texting capabilities before and was highly unlikely to being now.
The light from the screen lit Eri's face in the darkness as she turned another corner. With no texts and no-one to text she let her attention drift onto a cheap pre-installed game. It wasn't particularly fun, but it was distracting in its own way.
A minute or so into level two she felt the back of her neck prickle. Almost as if...
'Someone's watching me'
Eri shook herself and began to berate the part of her mind that had chosen then, of all moments, to reveal its paranoid side when a noise came from her right and a hand grabbed her wrist and twisted it behind her back before pressing her face into the nearest wall.
"Give me your phone, iPod and purse," A voice, distinctly male, demanded of her. "or I'll break your arm."
A short gurgle of surprise made its way out of Eri's throat as she tried to think of what to do.
"You'll have to let go first." she said with a remarkable clarity that hadn't possessed her the second before. The almost-mugger was thrown off course for a second, he should be the one making demands and this little girl should be a sobbing, frightened mess by now. "Let go."
Something in Eri's voice scared her assailant. He dropped her arm as if it was burning wood and stepped back as she turned around with a glare and resolve fixed firmly on her face, and a dull orange glow in her eyes. Eri could feel her teeth sharpen on her tounge and took a second to revel in the feeling before she leaped at the now terrified mugger.
Swinging a low blow into his abdomen Eri could feel her heart race in genuine excitement. Cell phone and iPods were all well and good, but this was true entertainment.
"And it's not like he doesn't deserve it." she thought out loud, canines glinting in a non-existant light. The poor excuse for a criminal couldn't have answered if he wanted to as he was feeling the wrath of two broken ribs and a quickly forming black eye. After another swipe of Eri's steel fists he was thoroughly unconcious and her new found fun was well and truly over.
Eri shrugged to herself as she picked up her iPod which had fallen out of her pocket. Her eyes flashed a final time before returning to their original colour and her teeth gently shrinking back to normal.
"It might be worth going home now."
She left the potential hospital patient face down in the alley and concentrated on getting home again, her heart still racing in her chest and a slight skip in her step.
Stepping quietly out of the shadow of a nearby wall a figure began to trace the girl it was now so familiar with. It stepped over the unfortunate man and had to jog slightly to get her back in its sights but when it did all it did was follow like it had for the last two months.
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Eri hated school.
Honestly she only went for her mother in exchange for kick-boxing lessons. She didn't have any friends, nor had she really tried to make any, nor did it bother her. They wouldn't understand her peculiar habits anyway and she'd never felt like explaining herself.
It was a dull Tuesday approximately a week after the incident in the alley and Eri had been bored ever since. The initial high had been good but that just made the moment it faded even worse. Her teacher droned on in front of her but any interest Eri had had in staying awake in lessons that day had died the second she sat down.
Nothing was diverting anymore.
"Kamei-san?"
With a low sigh Eri turned to the girl next to her and replied in a matching whisper.
"What is it Yuki?"
"Sh-shouldn't you be, uh... making notes?"
"I don't see why I should. I'm never gonna look at them again." The other girl bit her lip and turned back to her own pages of writing, but now she regarded them dubiously... almost as if she'd see the light.
Eri rested her head on her hands and idly bit a fingernail, simultaneously boring and amusing herself. She did this so often her nails were a complete mess. Luckily something happened to break the monotony of that Tuesday.
A knock came at the door and behind it stood a girl. A new girl.
"I'm so sorry I'm late." The new girl called politely into the room. "I do hope I'm not disturbing."
"Not at all Takahashi-san. Why don't you introduce yourself to your new classmates?"
'Takahashi-san' nodded and Eri watched her, intrigued by how happy she seemed to be to be in school.
"Well," she began as she stood at the front of the room two hands clasped lightly in front of her, her bag slung over her shoulder. "My name is Takahashi Ai. I've just moved to this part of town and I expect you'll all take very good care of me."
Well, she was interesting until she said that. Eri boredly watched her sit down and flip open a notebook, expecting to see her diligently begin to take notes she was thrown for a loop when Ai's expression changed into a far less amiable look and stared straight at her. Eri's eyes widened in response and she felt a powerful urge to look away from the new girl. Instead she fought it away and kept the eye contact, resolutely deciding that she wouldn't be intimidated. Ai stared a few seconds longer before she smiled a wide happy, confusingly genuine, smile and looked back down at her book.
Eri decided at that second that she would steer clear of Takahashi Ai.
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aieri :wub:
lookin forward for e next update..XD
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A/N: This is the longest chapter of anything I've EVER written and I'm pretty damn proud of it. I've been working on it all day, on two different computers thanks to the invent of the memory stick. Anyway, expect more Ai, a new character, some more mystery and a little bit more vampirism.
Hope you enjoy it,
JG
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Takahashi Ai was the strangest creature Eri had ever come across. She always seemed happy and sunny, friendly and hard-working even in study periods - where almost everybody just slacked off, only ever doing enough work to make the teacher think they were studying. Ai was the perfect student, until no-one was looking and she fixed Eri with the firmest stare she'd ever seen in her life. One which rivalled a furious mother's.
For all Eri's determination not to be, she was scared of the new girl. Ai's gaze seemed to smoulder at her and Eri was worried that she could be bipolar. At least when it came to her.
They hadn't spoken at all, even when they had to do group work for a project no words were exchanged between them and it confused her. For all Takahashi Ai's disturbing focus on her there was the barest minimum of interaction, but Eri hadn't tried to pursue it. She wasn't used to being afraid.
School was less dull now, but Eri still hated it. A surprise quiz did nothing to enthuse her - or anyone else for that matter. Apparently twenty-five minutes was and appropriate time within which she could finish the four pages of multiple choice in front of her, so she did what she always did. Guessed - with out even looking at the question. She'd probably end up with lines reading 'What is the capital of England?' - 'Jerusalem' but it wouldn't be the first time.
About half way through Eri started feeling very... odd. Her fingers were tingling and her eyes were burning, she could feel hot tears starting to well into her eyes and roll down her cheeks. And then her teeth started to ache in a familiar way, elongating without her wanting them to. It hurt... a lot. Eri held her hands against her face trying to hide her wet cheeks. She couldn't feel her feet and the tingling in her hands was spreading down her arms.
She couldn't stand it. Eri stood up in the middle of the quiz and ran blindly as fast as she could out of the room.
There was no-one in the hallways luckily, otherwise Eri would have been forced to take them out, and she wouldn't have stopped herself. Not even by telling herself that they didn't deserve a punch in the face - the pain was unbearable and it annoyed her that she was the only one feeling it.
"Eri stop!"
'No'
"Eri stop now! You don't know where you're going!"
Whoever was yelling at her was also running behind her. And was very fast.
"Eri," The voice was right in her ear then. Familiarity slammed into her and she stopped in shock. "finally! Sit down."
She obeyed Ai without question and dropped against a wall, amazed at how she was still within school walls - considering how fast she was running. Eri looked up into Ai's sweatless but very stern face.
"I didn't know you could run so fast."
"Nor I you." Ai replied simply as she sat next to the still tearing girl and held out a tissue. "Here."
Eri took it quickly and held it against her eyes. Miraculously the burning stopped, feeling returned to her limbs and her teeth shrunk back to normal. She could feel a headache coming on.
'What the hell was that?'
"That," began Ai. "was a power surge, and quite a nasty one at that."
"How did you..? You know what never mind." Eri half-grumbled the last part of her sentence after looking at Ai. She didn't want her to think that she couldn't handle anything herself but she'd already made a fool out of herself by sprinting out of the room.
'So much for standing my ground'
"Look Eri, I can't explain most of this to you here, but you need to know all of it before... well before we can help you."
"What are you talking about? And who's 'we'?"
Ai sighed a placed a hand on the other girl's shoulder. She leaned into her ear and whispered the words Eri had hoped she'd never have to hear for as long as she lived.
"You're a vampire."
Out of shock, Eri pushed Ai away with semi-supernatural strength and stood up intent on running far away from this frightening girl who could read minds and knew too much about her.
"I am too," Said the aforementioned girl, still on the floor. "but I'm not reckless like you. I know my strength and I know when to stop myself from, say, nearly killing a man for trying to rob me."
Eri shook her head, willing what was now a migraine away. "How do you know about that? About me? About everything?"
Ai stood up and fixed her with that firm gaze that Eri had become so accustomed to by now. She couldn't help but keep the other girl's gaze, trying to match the look with one of her own. Ai smirked briefly and tapped Eri on the shoulder twice.
"You're stubborn and I'm not sure if that's a good thing yet. We'll see. I don't know everything, only what I need to and don't worry the only reason I found out about the mugger is because I was there."
"You were following me." Said Eri, a statement not a question. It was a reasonable conclusion, but that didn't mean Eri wasn't angry about it.
"No!" Exclaimed Ai firmly. "I was doing no such thing, I just happened to be there."
"I'm not sure why, but I believe you."
"Eri, I need to talk to you about this. You have powers which you sort of know how to control but a few minutes ago I could feel it, you let it slip, you could have hurt anyone and anything. The surge-"
"Explain that first," Demanded Eri softly. "What's a 'surge'?"
"I can't... not here. Just feel safe in the knowledge that you felt it and so did I. You're not crazy Eri, you're just losing some control, it's nothing we can't help you with."
"If you can't tell me everything now when will you?"
Ai pulled out her cell phone and indicated that Eri do the same. "I'll text you with a time and place tonight. There's people you need to meet and things that need to be discussed." Once both numbers were keyed in and labelled, Ai nodded at Eri and gave her a warm smile.
"You may not trust me, but I can answer your questions. I'll contact you later right now I suggest you go home, you have a headache don't you?" Eri nodded and didn't question how the girl knew that. "Get some rest. I have to go back to class, if I tell them that you'd been complaining of a headache and stomach ache for a few days they'll likely believe me."
"I did just run out didn't I?"
"Don't worry, the teacher likes me, and I think she's scared of you. It'll be fine."
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At home Eri looked back over what could possibly be the weirdest day of her life. Even weirder than the day her teeth first appeared and she bit her tounge in shock. Ai knew, she was a vampire too and she offered to tell her everything she wanted to know. Slowly but surely, the more she though about it, the more she realised that there was an authority about Ai and she wanted to respect that. But she couldn't yet, she didn't know her or trust her - but that would come in time.
Eri convinced her mother that she should spend most of the day in bed - rather than indulge some strange cure that she was convinced would rid Eri of all her ills - and she waited for Ai's text for hours. When it finally came she was disappointed.
'Eri,' It read.
'Things came up, we'll have to meet in a few days.
I won't be in school, if anyone asks tell them it's a family emergency.
I'll contact you later.
Ai'
'What happened?' Eri wondered before she texted back an affirmative message with a low heart. 'Ai, you're not making any sense.'
A few minutes of disappointed boredom later and Eri decided that she wanted to go out. There would be no way her mom would let her out of the front door so she had to be creative... and use the window. She'd done this a million times before and somehow had never been caught, but Eri never questioned her own luck just in case it ran out.
She didn't feel restless enough to run anywhere so instead she just wondered around a bit and looked for a good place to sit and think. Which ended up being a bit of curb beneath a streetlamp only a street or so away from her home. Eri didn't like being too far away from somewhere safe when it was dark.
The floor was cold but Eri couldn't have cared less as she breathed in the cool night air. The headache had eased off hours ago and she hadn't experienced anything else like after... what had Ai called it?... the 'surge'. She still didn't understand that.
'What exactly is a surge?' She asked herself pulling her legs into her chest and tapping her fingernails on her arms. 'And why did it affect me so much?'
"Whatever it was," she continued out loud. "it hurt like hell."
"It was supposed to."
Eri looked around the ring of light cast by the streetlamp but she couldn't see anything or anyone.
"Who's there? I can't see you!"
Nothing moved into the light and Eri wondered for a moment if Ai was wrong, and that she was going crazy. It definitely seemed like she was hearing voices. It wasn't long until her fears of her sanity were put to rest when a moment later a foot was put into the light. It was clad in a long white sock and a shiny shoe. The owner - a girl - moved completely into the light shortly afterwards, but her eyes were shadowed and she towered above the seated Eri.
"It was supposed to hurt." The girl said as she leaned down to meet Eri's eyes. "That was the whole point."
Eri stood quickly. "What are you talking about? How could-"
"The surge," the girl clarified. "was sent by my leader to flush out a few latent, clumsy vampires who made a couple of mistakes. She wasn't happy with them. It acts as a lure and a beacon at the same time."
Eri looked at her blankly.
"Oh, don't worry. I know I'm practically talking to a brick wall. No-one's told you any of this, have they?"
"Ai was goi-"
"You mean Takahashi Ai? She got to you already?" The girl cursed and stood up. "And here I was thinking that... ugh, nevermind. Don't listen to her Eri, she's just going to twist you to her pretty little happy way of thinking and then it'll be curtains for you and everyone else."
"How do you know my name?"
"You- Eh? Are you not listening to anything I'm saying? Look I'll make it simple for you, join Takahashi's side and there's a very high chance you'll die young. Does that help?"
Eri's head spun. What the hell was this strange young girl gabbling on about? Ai? Death?
'Today has been the most confusing day of my life!'
"Oh, for God's sake. Who are you?" Eri demanded of the odd girl in front of her. She jumped surprised at how harsh it had come out sounding.
"A vampire, like you. A Night Vampire, unlike you. And I chose my side when I was ten, completely unlike you, because you have absolutely no idea what's going on."
"I mean, what's your name?"
"Oh. Well, next time be more specific!" She stepped backwards, out of the light, and Eri couldn't see her anymore.
"My name's Reina."
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Oooo... Now I'm not normally a vampire fic person, but this is certainly interesting. Ai-Reina fight for Eri... o-o I look forward to the next chapter! ^^
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Whoaa interesting. Esp cuz it revolves around Eri~ I hope Reina is telling the truth!
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Hmmmm..... This is interesting. I hope Eri still have her clumsy persona. I love her that way. Hoping for the next chapter
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wow. Vampire fic with everyone as a vampire? SOSAM! :P
First Ai-sama now Reina?? nice.
so im guessing, Ai is the day vampire or sth? lol.
i love vampire fics (along with pirate ones)
its getting exciting! really! me Vampire FREAK! :D moar moar moar~ :wub:
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Thanks for replying everyone. Unfortunately, I won't be posting another chapter for a couple of days because we're staying with family for New Years like we always do.
I'm working on Chapter Three right now, but I might not finish before we leave :( If I don't I'll be armed with a notebook and pen and will be scribbling away even during the Annual Hootenanny!
Anyway here's a short preview for Chapter Three. It's some of the dialogue with a lot of detail and some important facts cut out - but you get the gist
PREVIEW FOR CHAPTER THREE
"You! What are you doing here?"
"I was hoping I could talk to you."
"How do you know where I live, Reina?"
"Glad you remember my name Eri... I only want to help. Do you know what you really are?"
"Er... a vampire?"
"Close enough."
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A/N: I DID IT. We leave in an hour and I finished it! Okay, so it's shorter than the others... by a lot... but I really love my characterisation of Reina and I hope you do too :D Reina probably won't be back for another chapter or so, we'll see, but truths are starting to emerge and the plot is beginning to make sense in my head.
Enjoy a short Chapter Three
JG
Eri texted Ai at least six times over the next day or so. She didn't get a single reply and all she could do was sit and dwell and be not just a little bit frightened by everything that was suddenly happening to her. The appearance of this Reina girl was the nail in the coffin of Eri's curiosity and she wanted to know everything immediately.
But wherever Ai was, she was unreachable. When Eri gave up texting and tried to call the number, she'd been connected but all she could from the other end was silence and Eri wasn't sure whether to be worried or annoyed.
Eri had successfully managed to skip school for another couple of days but she didn't venture outside again - just in case. By now she was very used to boredom and welcomed it with open arms, it was better than the bizarre whirlwind of activity that had left her in this state.
Nothing much really happened.
Well, until her bedroom door opened and there stood her mother and another shockingly familiar face.
"Here she is Reina," Said Eri's mother, who had her hand on the doorknob and a large smile on her face. "it's so kind of you to drop off the work she's been missing."
"I'm only too happy to help." Replied Reina politely with a surreptitious wink in Eri's direction.
"Eri, you never told me you had such a nice friend!"
'I never knew' She thought to herself, sarcasm dripping from each imaginary syllable.
"Is it alright with you, Kamei-san, if I stay and talk with Eri-chan for a while?"
'Eri-chan!?'
Her mother nodded with another huge smile and backed out of the doorway, letting Reina enter whilst closing the door behind her. Eri looked towards the door desperately but it was already shut.
"You! What are you doing here?"
"I was hoping I could talk to you."
"How do you know where I live, Reina?" Shouted Eri as she climbed out of her bedsheets and faced the other vampire.
Reina shrugged and made herself comfortable on the desk by the door. She picked up a fluffy pink pen and flicked it around in the air before she began to pull the feathers out.
"Reina!"
"Glad you remember my name Eri." She put the pen down with a smirk. "You know it's not hard. There aren't many other Kamei Eri's in the area and databases are a surprisingly easy search."
'God, I was hoping I could talk to Ai before I had to deal with her again. She likes the sound of her own voice too much'
"Now that's not nice," Admonished Reina. "I only want to help. Besides didn't I already warn you about Takahashi?"
Eri's eyes could possibly have been the size of dinner plates, they certainly felt that wide. How was it that everyone knew what she was thinking?
"You know, I feel like I'm really not getting anywhere with you." Said Reina to herself, out loud. She fixed her eyes on the ceiling and swung her legs backward and forwards, hitting the wooden desk with each movement. "But you're interesting and you've got potential so I'll stick with it. Now, Kamei Eri," She stopped swinging her legs and leaned forwards conspiritorally. "Do you know what you really are?"
"Er... a vampire?" Replied Eri dumbly, not knowing where Reina was quite going with her question.
"Close enough." She leaned back again. "Specifically, you're a Day Vampire but I think you've pretty much already figured that out."
All Eri could do was look dumbfounded.
"Being a Day Vampire means you're more powerful in the daytime. Sunlight energises you, whereas moonlight drains you. I'm a Night Vampire it's exactly the same thing just the opposite way round. I'm sure you've noticed that you tend to feel more comfortable being alone when the sun's shining..." Reina paused, allowing a slightly stunned nod from Eri. It frightened her, how things were beginning to make more sense. "There are a couple of special skills that come along with that. No-one ever really told me what a Day Vampire's skills actually are so you'll have to ask someone else about that, but Night Vamps usually have the ability to fade into the surroundings and-"
"Read minds?"
Reina looked over at Eri slyly. "Sometimes."
'Does that mean Ai-' She cut off her own thought. What if Reina was listening?
"Reina?"
"Yeees?"
"I want you to leave. Right now" She sat down on her bed and stared directly at the Night Vampire. "And don't ever come here again."
"Eh? I thought I was telling you everything you wanted to know, how come you're telling me to- Oh, I get it! You're scared!" Reina looked delighted at her conclusion. "Are you scared of me? Please don't be. It's Takahashi that's the problematic one - You've got nothing to fear where I'm concerned."
'Other than having my ear talked off.'
"Hey!" Cried an indignant Reina. "Why are you so mean? I only want to help."
"So you keep saying." Eri yelled standing up again. "But with what and for what reason? And why do you keep saying that Ai's dangerous?"
Reina didn't say anything for a moment nor did she look at Eri. When she started to speak it was quietly and as far as Eri could tell, completely uncharacteristic.
"I- I can't tell you that. Any of it. My superiors wouldn't let me. I was supposed to get you to trust me," The vampire sighed and met Eri's eyes with her own sad ones. "that was my mission. I guess I failed."
If Eri had blinked she would have missed Reina's eyes glowing a dull purple, she also would have missed the nearly superhuman jump she made out of the window onto the ground below, like Eri herself had done a thousand times before.
Eri watched her leave, confused and guilty.
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Oooooh....this fic is really good :w00t: I stopped everything I was doing so I could read all 3 chapters one after another (bit of a rarity as I'm usually 'trying' to do a million things at once). That's how much I enjoyed / got sucked in by it :oops:
Bring on the next chapter!!!
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...Now I'm really confused who to trust, Reina or Ai-chan. o_O I do feel bad for Reina... Gah. Must. Know. What. Happens. T__T I look forward to chapter 4! ^___^
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/me reads title.
:tama: <= closest thing to a "vampire" smiley that we have. XD
EDIT: Interesting concept of having the 2 sides (day VS night) play a part in the characteristics of the characters. It's gonna be a ReinAi battle for the turtle! :rockon:
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oh, so now...
wuht happened to Ai?
mysterious. woo/ :D
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Day walker? It's reminds me of the Movie Twilight (althou I haven't the movie yet.) and Blade. hehehehe.
Choosing between Ai and Reina is really difficult. Both have their own motives. So I guess Eri use her instinct. She felt good when Ai was around. But with Reina, she feels annoyed. I think that's why she choose Ai. But I'm also thinking that the reason why she feel comfortable around Ai is because they meet in day time. Day vampires energies at day time. Their power drain in night time. Mood and emotion must have been affecting them as well? Oh and another thing.... Eri being scared with Reina might be true. They've meet at night right? Eri must have felt Reina's overwhelming power. Well this all just a theory. Hhehehehehe. Looking forward for the next Chapter. Good luck
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Can't chat for long as I'm leeching off someone else's wireless :D and I don't know how long I can stay connected.
You're all so kind. I'll do some personal replies at the beginning of the next chapter, but for now just know that I love you!!! :wub:
Oh, and... the Day and Night thing... it's not exactly what you think it is, but I'll remain the mysterious author on that until I post Chapter Four and even then it may not be completely clear 'till chapter five! I'll admit it now. I'm making this up as I go along.
Stay tuned :D
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A/N; Happy New Year everyone! A new year, a new chapter. Expect some new characters, a couple more loose ends and a couple more tied up.
Personal replies
@Lolli - Wowzers... am I really that good? Be careful I might get big-headed! Hope you like chapter four as much.
@ShikyoxYaiba - I'll try not to lord the fact that I know exactly what's going to happen over you :P Who knows, it may become clear it may not.
@JFC - Maybe we should get some vampire icons. But then again how much are they gonna be used?
@ringo-hime - You'll find out what happened to Ai soon... but for now I'll keep it mysterious.
@Sancho - Wow, you really know how to read into things! It makes me wish that that was actually part of my plot. Sorry Sancho... it'll remain a theory, but I will explain what it's all about soon.
Anyway, enjoy the newest chapter because this was really difficult for me to write!
JG
When Eri got back to school, Ai was there too - sporting a broken wrist and the remnants of an ugly bruise on the underside of her chin. But she wouldn't tell anyone what caused it.
"No I wasn't in hospital for very long," is what she said whenever someone asked. "we just had a few issues moving into the new house. That's why I was absent for a few days."
Eri knew she was lying but persuing it seemed like a bad idea and besides, she hadn't exactly breached the topic of meeting Reina. The last thing she wanted to be was a hypocrit. It had been difficult to talk to Ai at all anyway, she just didn't seem to want to get into any conversations - Eri would have put it down to complete avoidance if Ai hadn't been doing it to everyone, and if she hadn't said 'Hello' every morning.
'Something must be wrong.' Was Eri's unsurprising conclusion. 'Something's happened which got Ai hurt and made her worry enough to blank everyone.'
And that made Eri worry, because somehow she knew that it would end up involving her in some way, shape or form. Ai, if she even looked over at her, was giving her pensive looks and they were very unsettling for Eri. By the next Friday Eri was almost yearning for some conversation with Ai. She'd been thinking about everything, especially her bizarre, thankfully unrepeated, meetings with Reina and had decided that she needed a lot of answers a.s.a.p.
"Ai!" She exclaimed on that Friday just after leaving the classroom. The girl in question turned around and looked at Eri with absolutely no surprise. "I'm fed up of this. I want you to tell me absolutely everything."
"It..." Ai looked around herself and waited a moment for the hall to clear before continuing her sentence. "It might be too late to get you involved, Eri. It could get dangerous before you're ready for it."
"What?" replied Eri, half-dumb. 'Dangerous?... Reina'
Ai sighed and rummaged for her phone in her bag. After a few moments of texting she looked back up at Eri with a semi-satisfied expression.
"I know this is short notice, but would your parents mind if you came to my house for a while. There's a couple of people I'd like you to meet."
Despite everything Eri chuckled to herself. "I'm sure mom'd be thrilled."
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Ai's house was modest. It was really the only way to describe it. It was medium sized and warm but there was barely enough decoration and furniture to give the impression of it being a home. Eri made to ask Ai where her parents were but immediately thought better of it - she knew so little about the girl.
'What if I said the wrong thing?'
She expected to be led into the living room, but instead she was led further on and into a room adjacent to the kitchen. The first thing Eri noticed about the room was that it had large, heavy bolts on the door which didn't look like they could be compromised easily. The second thing she noticed was the first aid box that hung on the wall not too far from the door.
"Sit down." offered Ai gently as she did so herself. There were three large leather armchairs in the room that Eri had somehow missed in her initial appraisal of the room. She sat down opposite of Ai and watched as the other vampire nursed her wrist a little before looking up. "I'm sorry I didn't reply to any of your texts, I'm not sure that I can tell you about why just yet. Plus, I want to avoid overloading you with information."
She sat back against the chair and shifted her weight around getting comfortable. Eri wondered if that meant that this would be a long conversation.
"I'll start at the basics. There are two types of vampires, the -"
"The Day Vampires and the Night Vampires."
"Yes." Ai looked at Eri, suspicion beaming from her eyes "I thought you didn't know any of this."
"I-I..."
'There's no point in lying'
"Lying about what?"
Eri jumped and bit her lip guiltily. "After you left, I met a girl. Another vampire. She told me some stuff but there was something about her that unsettled me. I don't know what it was but when she was around..."
"Did she tell you her name Eri?"
"I only know her given name - Reina."
"Reina? Oh no, not her again!" Ai completely slumped into her chair and closed her eyes. She massaged her temples and Eri found herself looking at the most stressed person she had ever seen. "Tell me everything she said to you. Everything."
"She... er, said something about the surge the first time I met her -"
"First time?" Ai opened her eyes. "Never mind, go on."
"She said that it was supposed to hurt and that it was sent by her 'leader', or something, but she didn't explain what it was."
Ai nodded and looked at Eri. "A surge is basically a giant power wave, they're telekinetic and telepathic and incredibly difficult to send out. You'd need a lot of vampires, Day and Night, to get one of those going. They're not sent to destroy, but they are made to hurt. What it does is encourage all vampires within a certain power range to get up and run towards whoever's sending it. Unluckily, you must be within that power range and that's why you ran out of class. Does that make sense?"
"Yes," Said Eri, relieved to have finally gotten at least one answer to her ever building repetoire of questions. "I understand."
"What else did Reina say?" Continued Ai, saying the name as if were painful to do so.
"Well, that Day Vampires are more comfortable and powerful in the daytime and vice versa and that special skills come along with that. That a Night Vampire can fade into shadows and can read minds..." Eri swallowed before proceeding with her question. "Ai, are you a Night Vampire?"
"Yes." Ai replied calmly. "Don't worry Eri, being a Night Vampire doesn't mean I'm evil," She laughed. "I just have a different... skill-set if you will. Being Day or Night doesn't affect your morality, it's like speaking different languages. While I don't exactly express myself the same way as you do, it doesn't mean we aren't talking about the same thing."
A large sigh of relief made its way from Eri's chest and Ai laughed loudly, a smile gleaming from her face. It made Eri smile too.
"Did Reina say anything else?"
Uncomfortably, Eri decided to keep the rest to herself. Reina's warnings about Ai were confusing and she wanted to decide how seriously to take them before she placed her faith completely in Takahashi Ai. In the end, it was her decision. With a little guilt in the pit of her stomach, Eri shook her head to Ai's question.
"Then I suppose I'll continue with what I was going to tell you before. As a Night Vampire I'm not particularly qualified to tell you about being a Day Vampire, but two other vampires live here, Day Vampires, and they'll tell you what you need to know. They should arrive back soon actually." Ai glanced at her watch, which now sat on the opposite wrist to accomodate the cast. "I suppose you've figured out that Reina is not on my side." Eri nodded, very much aware of the fact. "Tanaka Reina made an ill informed and rash decision when she first discovered her powers which led her into the arms of the Nos."
"Nos?"
"As in Nosferatu. Not very original, and with all the wrong connotations, but you have to give them credit for thinking at least a bit laterally." Eri snorted loudly, which Ai looked very much amused by. "All the Nos want is control. I'll make this very clear Eri, we are not two of few. Not even just in the Tokyo area. There are a huge number of Vampires all over the world and unfortunately that's what gives the Nos their advantage. They're an organisation, while those who resist them do so in their own time and in their own way and don't have to answer to people who are many ranks higher than themselves. Collectively we don't have an identity, and to some extent that's what gives us our advantage. The Tokyo vampires, me included, call themselves The Others just because we felt that some form of co-ordinated operation was needed. The Nos in this area are planning something big and they have been for a while and we're worried that something might happen soon."
"Do you know what they're doing?"
"Not exactly but it falls within the realms of a coup d’état."
"Ai, what -"
Eri was cut of by the loud opening and slamming closed of the front door. Ai sighed, stood and motioned for Eri to follow her back into the kitchen.
"I hope you didn't break my door again Aika!"
A small figure sped into the room carrying a school bag along with one full of groceries. The girl, whom Eri assumed was Aika, shook her head vehemently and smiled brightly.
"Don't worry Ai," came a sweet voice from the doorway. "everything's still intact."
Ai nodded sternly. "Eri, I'd like you to meet the two Day Vampires I mentioned. Kamei Eri, this is Michishige Sayumi and Mitsui Aika and they share the house with me."
Eri smiled at the girls while yet more questions buzzed around her head.
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Syau and Aika? :shocked: This'll get interesting...
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If all goes well, it should :lol:
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yay! moar info~
NOS!!!!
SOSAM!
Sayu and Aika~ more kyara~ :P
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Interesting that morality isn't determined by whether or not one is a Day or a Night vampire. It definitely makes things more complex, to say the least.
So then I take it that the "Nos" are the the true "dark" vampires? From the way Aichan describes them, they're the dominant side (at least in terms of numbers). In a way, it's sort of like Star Wars. The Nos are like the Empire, and those opposed to them are the Rebellion. =P
Sayu and Aika? :shocked: This'll get interesting...
Oh yeah. :lol:
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NOS? Hahaha. Good thing Ai told Eri what it meant because for me, I thought it was some kind of Car's Nitrous brand (playing to much need for speed game :P).
After reading the chapter, i'll still hold to some of my theory althou I'm wrong for Ai being a Day vampire :D . I guess Sayumi and Aika saved our Ai from the other vampires. So the story is not about Day vs Night vamps but the world domination of NOS ..... :w00t: :w00t:.... organization. Looking forward because like Eri, your readers still has a lot of question. :D :D
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So I've had a part of my plot compared to Star Wars and Need For Speed?
AWESOME!
I don't have much time to work on the next chapter in a couple of days, but I should have it on Sunday, if not before.
Thanks for reading guys.
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Okay so I lied...
I haven't updated in a while, but I've not abandoned this. I've had exams.
I will put the next chapter up in a day or so. Promise
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damn... i thought there was a new chapter...
No worries Joyo, take your time!
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A/N; Dammit! I can't even keep my own deadlines. And it's mainly because I just couldn't be bothered to boot up my computer... Sorry about that guys, but it's a snow day. My first ever SNOW DAY!!! I live in England, it doesn't happen very often (read as; Ever).
It's been so long I can't even remember which chapter this is XD
Enjoy anyway,
JG
Aika and Sayumi were nice enough, maybe a little too nice for Vampires, though Eri did find herself thoroughly worn out by the time she'd had only one conversation with Aika. Just after she'd made the introductions Ai excused herself to the kitchen under the guise of getting some drinks - she'd been far too long and Eri suspected she was probably just leaving her to deal with the two Day Vampires.
"Sayumi?" Eri inquired slowly once Aika had stopped talking about her day in a loud voice, presumably so Ai could hear as well. "Ai said that you were both Day Vampires and I was wondering if you could tell me a little about what comes with that."
Aika perked up again, much to Eri's dismay. "So you're a DV too!?"
'DV?'
"She means Day Vampire." Answered Ai as she re-entered the room with, suspiciously, only two mugs in hand. She offered one to Eri which she took gratefully. "Mittsi has a habit of turning everything she can into an acronym."
"Oh." Said Eri. 'It sounds like a car.' She took as sip out of the mug. Coffee... strong. Ai winked at her.
"Weeeell, a DV is- what's the word Sayu?"
"Telekinetic. We're telekinetic." Sayumi supplied.
"Ummhmm! We move things with our minds."
Eri jumped in surprise, she knew what 'telekinetic' meant - she wasn't stupid, but she wasn't expecting it to be a real ability. Her head began to reel with possibilities and she started to smile when it turned to aiming fountain pens at next-doors dumb, wailing cat.
"Don't get carried away Eri," cautioned Ai. "It's not something vampires just stumble onto being able to do. It takes a lot of talent, practice and a really good mentor - It's hard work. Even Sayumi hasn't been able to lift anything more than a book and her vampirism manifested when she was about three years old."
Eri turned her eyes to Sayumi in disbelief. 'Three years old!? No way!'
Sayumi smiled leisurely, barely aware of Eri's astonishment. "I've been trying really hard but I just don't seem to have the natural ability. Plus there aren't any teachers in the area... it's odd but Tokyo seems to be more of a Night Vampire place."
"Which takes its toll on a telepath, I can tell you." Ai interjected. "It's difficult to deal with that many voices in your head."
"I-is there anything else that you think I should know?" Eri continued doing her utmost best to disguise her disappointment.
"Only one thing for now," said Ai moving to sit next to Eri. "if there's anything else you need to ask feel free to contact Sayu or Aika at any time but... I have to ask you something important."
Eri nodded at Ai, indicating that she continue.
"Reina knows about you and she knows that you're in contact with me. She won't have a choice, she'll have to tell her superiors and that will put you in the same danger we're all in. To them you've as good as chosen your side-"
"I have." said Eri, surprised with the conviction in her voice. Ai looked pleased, Aika jumped up and down at the idea but was stilled by a firm glance from the older girl.
"I'm glad to hear that Eri but I don't think you're aware of exactly what's going on. If you chose to support the Others you're going to have to learn to defend yourself. And not from thieves and playground bullies," she said decisively across Eri's protestations at her fighting abilities. "What I'm trying to get at is; will you join Sayumi, Aika and many others and train for our inevitable conflicts with the Nos?"
Suddenly Eri felt frightened. With her blanket of confusion dispelled everything was so much clearer and she could sense the danger behind Ai's words. 'This could be a really bad idea.' She obviously hadn't considered the weight of her choice when she had spoken earlier and it was very close to coming back to bite her.
"Eri," said Ai softly, laying a hand on her shoulder. "you don't have to decide everything immediately and I won't impose anything on you, just... make sure you think it all through properly and make sure they're your choices."
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Eri was walking home at night again. With everything that had happened after last time maybe she shouldn't have done so, but honestly Eri was beyond caring. It was worth taking the time to think when all this information was still fresh in her head.
She knew that she was heading towards supporting Ai and the Others, but maybe she shouldn't get so involved. Danger was okay once in a while. Constant impending doom was another thing entirely. Plus she couldn't waltz home and say;
"Don't worry mom, I've just joined a large-scale vampire rebellion. The leg? Eh, it'll grow back"
Life just didn't work that way, even if she was something that most of the world's population thought was mythical.
'Confusing.' Eri sighed to herself.
Her feet walked a familiar route for several more minutes before her house came into view. It took Eri less than a minute to realise something was very, very wrong.
The front door hung away from the wall on one hinge and two windows were smashed beyond repair. She ran into the house without a second thought of the possible danger inside. Every room was trashed but there was no sign of who did it and, to Eri's vast relief, nothing was on fire. But where was...
"Mom!" Eri shouted as she ran into the kitchen to see a figure hunched in the corner of the room. Running to her mother Eri immediately went for the pulse and sighed in relief when she found it. "Mom? Mom?" She was unconcious and bleeding. Eri dialed the emergency services on her mobile and waited in a patient-panic for the ambulance to arrive.
It was only when the paramedics were lifting her mom into the vehicle and the neighbours were peeking out of their houses in curiosity that Eri allowed herself to show some emotion. Tears dripped from her eyes when she was told that she couldn't fit in the ambulance but she didn't scream bloody murder about it - she just nodded in agreement to follow later.
They drove off, the neighbours lost interest and Eri sat on her doorstep with her head in her hands.
Ten minutes later and Eri hadn't even gotten it together to call a taxi to take her to the hospital. And she was getting cold. She barely noticed the hand lay on her shoulder until its owner crouched infront of her.
"Reina?! What are you doing here?" demanded Eri knocking the hand off her shoulder.
"I'm so sorry Eri," claimed the Night Vampire with a twist of regret in her eyes. "I- I didn't know she was going to be there. If I had I wouldn't have-"
"Wait, you did all this?" Eri pushed Reina over as she stood up and advanced over her fallen figure.
"No! I gave orders - I had to!"
"This is all your fault!" yelled Eri stamping her foot dangerously close to Reina's left hand. Eri's eyes flared bright orange with fury and Reina scrambled back in fear. "Why did you have to do this anyway? What did I ever do to you? My house is a wreck," another stamp. "my mom is in the hospital" another stamp, even closer this time. "and 'sorry' just doesn't cut it!" This time her foot struck true and Reina screamed in pain as she felt her fingers buckle and break.
Eri removed her foot after no longer than a minute, glared at the vampire lying on the ground and left, ignoring her cries. When she cooled down she'd regret that but for now Eri took comfort in the idea that she'd managed to cause even a fraction of the pain she was feeling.
And the hospital was calling her name
A/N; ... got a little more dramatic at the end than I was planning, but I rather like it actually. Sorry Reina... you're Eri's punching bag today :( New character next chapter! Look forward to it
JG
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Uh oh... Poor Eri. :cry: I kind of do wonder if Reina will explain. This is really gonna push Eri in Ai-chan's direction... Or so it seems.
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Hoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooly crap Reina fucked up! :o
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Noooo Reina's not the bad guy!.. girl.. !! I hope...
now I'm curious, who ordered her to do this??... THAT PERSON IS THE BAD GUY! ... OR GIRL!
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Ah glad you updated! :D
Poor Reina...the side she's on seems so bad (that must mean it's the good side right? XD)...I hope Eri doesn't hurt Reina anymore but on the other hand I'm excited over the building up action. Can't wait to see Eri try out her telekinetic powers!
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me thinks... who's good and who's bad?
it's nice :yep:
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... Sorry about that guys, but it's a snow day. My first ever SNOW DAY!!! I live in England, it doesn't happen very often (read as; Ever).
Do you have any un-forecast snow today? I was like WOO HOO~ on Tuesday when it started, but now (Friday) I'm angry that it's snowed again. I want to go to Argos dammit!!!
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I want to apologise for my lack of comments. I'm having issues with writing things at the minute but I just want you to know that I still read this fic, and I'm still enjoying it a lot :twothumbs
Can't wait for the next chapter. Hopefully then I'll be able to give you a better comment.
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A/N;Good God it's been a while!
Sorry about that... I've just been too tired to sit down for an hour or so to type. You see I make this all up as I go along and the only time my writing seems to be any good is when I've got the "reply" box open, but I recently downloaded Wakeshima Kanon's album and it got me thinking again.
I'm sorry for not replying to your comments... I'm really bad at that, but know that I wouldn't be writing this without them :D
Please enjoy this new chapter even though it's probably going to be quite short
JG
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Eri blinked and sat up slowly. She yawned and reaching a hand towards her mouth, she looked at the digital clock by her beside. Somehow she had managed to beat the alarm clock by approximately ten minutes, and was now desperately wishing that sleep would grab her again... but no such luck - she had a schedule to keep.
Eri slipped out of bed and began throwing on the clothes she could find. The cold air in the bedroom hit her hard and she shivered uncontrollably for a few minutes whilst she rotated an ache out of her arm. Eri studied the room she stood in and thought, like she did every morning;
'Ai's been far too good to me'
And maybe she had been. Eri had no idea how she could possibly repay Ai for her kindness in the last couple of weeks, she had been taken in, given a new room (supplanting Sayumi, as it were) and food and warmth and all she had to do was turn up for training every Saturday, sometimes Sunday. Speaking of which...
Eri headed into the kitchen and immediately noticed the figure slumped over the table.
"Ai?" she questioned, shaking the girl in question lightly. "Ai?"
The girl emitted a loud groan as she regained conciousness.
'She must have been up all night again...'
"Don't worry about me," Ai said in a voice that immediately signalled she hadn't yet spoken that morning. "I'm alright."
"You shouldn't be-"
"It's important, Eri." she replied in a tone that decisively ended the consversation.
What was so important Ai wouldn't tell anyone and Eri had long since given up asking or wondering about it, but it was enough for the older girl to be losing sleep on a regular basis. But she wouldn't hear anything of anyone's concern for her.
Eri sat down at the table after briefly considering getting some breakfast - she'd need a lot of energy (it was Saturday after all) but she just couldn't be bothered to prepare/pour/accidentally burn anything. Ai rubbed her eyes and yawning most inelegantly staggered to her feet and towards the espresso machine.
As it turned out she would very much need the caffeine shot because, at the precise moment the cup had been filled and Ai was lifting it towards her lips, a loud thud was heard from upstairs. Meaning that Aika was now awake and in the process of bounding down the stairs, of course.
'Eventually, she's going to break something.' Thought Eri somewhat morbidly.
And when the girl appeared in the doorway and rushed over to the most sugary cereal she could find, Eri was once again grateful for Sayumi's great sacrifice.
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Training mainly consisted of combat practice which, from everything Ai had told her, didn't surprise Eri in the slightest. What did surprise her was the sheer number of people who were in the rented room when she walked in. Day and Night Vampires of all ages who all treated Ai like she was some kind of mortal goddess and by extension Aika, Sayumi and now herself were subjected to Hero-Worship too.
It made Eri sick. Ai was nice and all but she wasn't the greatest thing alive ever!
'Although,' Eri conceded 'in a few years she might be able to give Gandhi a run for his money.'
Currently, Ai stood at the front of the room leading the "class" in a serious warm-up. The woman could stretch and Eri, for all her kick-boxing, found it a little difficult to keep up. She was in 'tough leader mode' or 'TLM' if Aika had her way, and it was nigh on impossible for anyone to talk to her during the three hours she led the class.
That was only when the day was normal...
This time, training would certainly be abnormal.
Sometime during a particularly confusing sequence of moves the door swung open and a woman stumbled through. She moaned before slumping to the ground and proceeding to lose conciousness.
Eri froze as the familiarity of the scene struck her. Ai abandoned her 'Tough Leader Mode' and parted the stunned students like an ocean but no-one expected the sudden drop of her expression and the gasp of surprise as she neared the half-alive woman.
She skidded along the floor as she sped up. Ai brushed the hair out of the woman's face to confirm her identity.
"Nacchi?!"
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A/N; Ooh, I'm evil. I'm sorry about it taking so long to update.
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Nacchi too!? :omg: Wtf happened!?
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OMG this looks so interesting *.*
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woohooo!! Update!
Eri staying with Ai and Gang... Then what happened to Eri's mom? Sooo, Nacchi's a vampy too? She didn't get attacked by Reina too did she? Reina ain't ebil I tell ya! .. I hope...
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Chapter 6 1/2
A/N; To make up for the length of the last chapter I'm going to update today!!! and not leave it for a month ever again.
Well, here we go... Don't expect too many answers, but there'll probably be a couple of new mysteries ;)
@stefy- I deliberately left matters with Eri's mom a bit vague, hopefully to add a little more tension later. everything will be explained with my so far planned Ai-Reina confrontation! :twothumbs: but I get the feeling you'll know before then - I don't plan very far in advance XD
Please enjoy what should be considered Part Two of the last chapter,
JG
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Eri had never seen Ai so emotionally unguarded, nor had she seen Sayumi anything other than serene, but the usually placid girl was obviously panicking behind her eyes as she joined Ai next to the woman who had been identified as 'Nacchi'.
Eri shivered determined not to read into the situation too much but all she found herself thinking as she looked at the battered woman was
'Just like mom' Momentarily forgetting that she was in a room with a distraught Night Vampire. Ai fixed her with a harsh glare - there were tears of fright and worry in her eyes and Eri immediately felt guilty for forming the thought.
"Someone" began Ai, her voice thick with unshed tears. "help us move her into the medical room." It was just adjacent to the main training room but so far they'd never had to carry a full-grown, unconcious woman across the hall and into it. Vampire strength wasn't completely untrue, but it did have its' limits.
No-one stepped forward in response to Ai's half-request, half-command. The younger students were all too stunned to see their great mentor lose her steely exterior. Eri shook her head at them and, ignoring her own psychological protests, moved over to the small group on the floor.
Ai didn't acknowledge her help as they started to lift the woman, nor did she completely ignore it, but Eri knew she would probably need to apologise for her carelessly loud thought.
Within a couple of minutes they were setting the woman onto the convenient sofa bed and Ai began cleaning her wounds. Sayumi had barred Aika from entry to the room so it was just the three of them sitting in an uncomfortable silence while Ai ripped open bandages and applied alchohols and creams.
"Most of the blood isn't hers." Ai said quietly as she set a broken thumb.
Eri gave a cautious smile. "Isn't that a good thing?"
Ai looked up at her for the first time in fifteen minutes. "No."
Confused at the blunt dismissal, Eri looked over at Sayumi for answers. Sayumi signalled Eri to join her outside the room. "We can leave her for a few minutes," she said "she knows what she's doing."
Nodding, Eri followed her through the door into the next room where everyone was waiting in apprehension for a command from their fearless leader. Sayumi had no choice but to pick up the mantel and order everyone to go home for now - they'd call another practice on Sunday if it was needed but it wasn't likely.
Once the hall was clear of everyone but Aika, Sayumi made it clear that it wasn't her place to explain anything other than the fact that if it's someone else's blood, who's to say that it's an enemy's?
Eri felt her stomach drop even lower, she was worried for what exactly that could mean for the woman but she also felt stronger with hope that she would recover.
Most of the time the three girls sat outside waiting for Ai to tell them that they could enter the medical room was spent in silence. The situation was serious and it even managed to calm Aika out of her usual hype. No-one could find anything appropriate to say, so they didn't bother.
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Somewhere you'd only find if you weren't looking for it a girl was sitting against a wall which belonged to a purely white room. She looked completely out of place in the sterile room, with her long black hair, matted with dried blood stark against the painted surroundings.
She was scared out of her mind. She didn't know what was they wanted from her or what they were going to do to her, but she did know what the eventual conclusion would be...
They were going to kill her in the end. After all, that's what the Nos did with all their hostages.
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A/N; Good lord, the suspense!!! I wasn't even planning on that last bit so I hope you like the plot twist :D
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Whoa...
:stunned:
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.... Nos? So the Nos is responsible for Nacchi and Eri's mom's injuries? Who's the new hostage?!
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Sorry, not a new chapter.
Just a note to say that there should be a new chapter within the week and then I have around about three weeks of holiday and I'm planning on writing at least three chapters over that time...
And I still don't know how this is all going to end.
Quick Questions;
Do you think my plot is too linear?
I'm no good at foreshadowing because I don't plan my chapters and I'm a little worried it might be predictable
Is there a character you would really like to see?
I'm having some trouble choosing some girls
Do you feel sorry for Reina?
Cause that's the angle I'm going for... for now :twisted:
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Well. let see....
1. Linear stories are just fine. as long as it's not too complicated. You said your not good at foreshadowing but I think you can practice that by adding it on your work. But the most important thing is, enjoy on what your doing. I'm sure it will make you satisfy on your work. XD
2. You already put my beloved Eri :love: :love: :love:. But I think it will be great if Junjun is included. I think she's a Kamei Fan herself. :lol: :lol:
3. Based on your current chapters, I hate her...... :angry: for now...... But if she has enough reason why she did that, I might forgive her. :lol: :lol:
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Oh now that I think about it I have two more questions;
What do you think of my writing style?
and, most importantly
Are my chapter long enough?
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It all works fine for me.
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Do you think my plot is too linear?
Not really. I think it's quite balanced.
Is there a character you would really like to see?
Well there's Eri and Reina and Ai and Sayu so I'm not complaining~ Gaki-san maybe? Just to complete the Gorokkies circle XD
Do you feel sorry for Reina?
yes I do! ... Or maybe I'm just biased...
What do you think of my writing style?
It's good enough. Descriptive yet easy to understand which is why I like the way you write :)
Are my chapter long enough?
It's sufficient enough to keep me reading.
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Chapter 7
A/N; NEW CHAPTEEEERRRRR!
Sorry about that. I have had some major blocks recently and I honestly thought I'd already posted this... oops. But here's a chapter about our nameless captive!!! and a new character too.
Enjoy please,
JG
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The girl was currently slumped against the leg of the one piece of furniture in the whole room - the bed.
Her eyes were sore from crying and her fists screamed from the torture their collisions with the heavy metal door. She hadn't been trying to escape, she knew that wasn't a possibility, but she was hungry and tired and hadn't heard a single voice since her arrival. Even if it was to yell at her for causing too much noise it would be just enough of a break from the bleak sensory deprivation she was being subjected to.
No-one came and that must have been part of their plan.
The bed dug uncomfortably into her spine and she shivered through her thin bloodstained uniform. They hadn't even given her a change of clothes and she felt filthy as she had spent maybe days covered in someone else's blood.
It wasn't her own, they hadn't wanted to harm her.
There weren't any windows in the room, her only source of light was the single bulb hanging from the ceiling and the artsy lamp standing in the corner. The only clue she had to the passage of time was the fact that the light was periodically turned on and off, but she couldn't be sure whether this was indicative of day or night or just the Nos trying to mess with her. The girl was exhausted anyway and she didn't need mind games.
She spent most of her time on the floor like this but just as she was pondering the possibility of permanent scarring from the bed frame she heard the distinct click of heels outside the door. She looked up as it slid open and a woman stood behind it in a coat as white as the room. The woman was almost camouflaged against the walls.
'Almost a floating head' Thought the girl with miserable humour.
"Good afternoon imouto-chan," The girl cocked an eyebrow at the bizarre address but knew better than to challenge it. "How are you?"
When she didn't reply the woman's nearly amiable expression fell a little.
"No need to be so standoffish. I'm here to give you some company, " she looked the girl up and down. "and some new clothes while I'm at it."
Before the girl knew what was going on she felt all her zips and buttons start to undo themselves. Her laces de-knotted and her shoes and socks slid off her feet while her blazer and shirt miraculously peeled away from her arms. All the clothes piled themselves up at the Nos woman's feet. She kicked them distastefully.
"Reminds me of my school uniform." she muttered before producing a new set of clothes, seemlingly from nowhere.
"You might want to put these on," said the woman placing the garments at the girl's feet. "we don't supply central heating in the guest accomodation." She spoke without a hint of irony, almost as if she believed that the tiny white cell was a five star room.
The girl didn't move and the clothes sat on her toes, untouched. She was well aware of her undressed state but she didn't have the energy to try to cover herself.
The woman sighed. "Since you've decided to be uncooperative..."
The clothes moved by themselves again and in next to no time the girl realised she was fully dressed. She felt a sweeping sense of cleanliness and while her gratitude was great she made no move to express it.
"Well then imouto-chan, don't you want to know my name?" the woman asked lightly as she crouched. The girl shook her head. "My name is Rika, you can call me Rika-chan if you want to."
No reply. Rika sat next to the girl and laid her arm around her shoulders.
"You can talk to me," she said. "I'm here to be your friend."
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Abe Natsumi hadn't said anything for three days. Ai said that it was most likely shock, what at Eri did not wish to find out. Ai was acting surly and worried and quite obviously wasn't getting much sleep. Her bed was pristinely made every time Eri ventured towards her fearless leader's bedroom. Not to mention the lack of colour in Ai's face, it was a sure sign that something was horribly wrong...
Aika had remained quite placid for the last days and while it was a welcomed change it left the house feeling more than a little empty. Sayumi wasn't being very good company either and that led Eri into the conclusion that she knew more about Abe-san than she'd revealed thus far.
Eri was slowly losing the will to live again. She didn't like this much drama, but then again she had been aware that she was getting into something much bigger than herself from the beginning. But curiosity was killing the cat... or the turtle, whichever was more appropriate...
She was going to find out what was going on.
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I love your story! (Huge vampire fan. :wub:)
Very interesting I must say.
Keep going! :D
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Why do I get the feeling Eri's going to end up knowing the mystery girl being held by the Nos? :?
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A/N; Didn't take me as long this time :D
I'm amazed, I've actually just about figured out the whole plot!
Douzo
JG
Chapter Eight
Eri shook her head in disbelief at what she was seeing.
She'd been standing at her window for an hour or so enjoying the peace of the midnight air... well, it was more two a.m. air but what was the difference really? It was nice to have some time were it was just a simple case of living and Eri had found herself doing this often over the past few days.
The days were getting awkward now that Natsumi was healthy enough to do most everything for herself, but she would only talk directly to Ai and occassionally Sayumi. But Eri had heard her speak and wished she hadn't - Abe Natsumi was in extreme pain and Eri still didn't know why.
Espionage didn't suit her, not to mention the fact that she was living with a Night Vampire. Every attempt she'd made to implement her supposedly covert plans had been foiled one way or another and Eri was starting to get restless being in the middle of something which was obviously getting more and more dangerous as the days went by.
So she had found a little comfort in sitting at her window at night. This was the latest she'd stayed up since... she'd moved into the house but a splitting headache was preventing her from laying her head down.
But when Eri saw a figure in the darkness begin to approach the house all thoughts of pain suddenly disappeared. She picked her jacket up from the floor and shrugged it on all set to jump out of the window and confront the intruder but her preparation was spoiled by the sight of Ai exiting the house.
"Tanaka!" She half-yelled and Eri stopped dead at the window frame.
Surely enough the dark figure moved closer and Eri could see the Nos vampire's pigtails. Eri needed to get closer if she was going to eavesdrop properly.
"Konbanwa Ai-chan," The wonky-eyed vampire said in a chipper tone just seconds after Eri landed behind the garden wall. She peeked over the top of the bricks with curious eyes and prayed that she wouldn't be discovered by the two telepaths. "How are you tonight? I hear your meetings with Gaki-san have been going well."
"Stop sending her, Tanaka," Ai bit out. "it's you I want to talk to!"
"I'm here now aren't I?" Reina replied sassily.
"If you're trying to piss me off-"
"Is it working?"
The air was thick for a moment and as far as Eri could tell from Ai's posture, Reina was right... it was working. Ai's fists clenched but Reina seemed completely unfazed by the death glare she was receiving, in fact, she wasn't even acknowledging it. Eri shimmied along the length of the wall slightly to avoid having to stand on her tiptoes and ducked behind a bush when she ran out of wall.
"What have you done with her?"
"I haven't done anything. I don't know why you'd suspect me."
"You lead the raids Reina and after what happened with Eri's mom, I don't know why I wouldn't."
Reina stamped her foot hard, her expression turning sour. "I didn't mean for Kamei-san to get hurt. I didn't even know she was there!"
"Remorse doesn't suit you Reina, we both know she was collateral damage for you, don't pretend that you hate your job. The only thing you regret is pushing Eri further away from the Nos!" Eri shivered at Ai's tone and the rememberance of that night.
"I didn't plan to kill-"
"It doesn't matter what you intended anymore. Now that she's gone I've taken responsibility for Eri, you can't get to her. I won' t let you."
'I must be tired,' thought Eri. 'there's no way Reina looked disappointed at that.'
"But this is all beside the point," Ai took three steps towards Reina and snatched her collar with one hand. "what have you done with her?"
"I haven't done anything! I didn't raid Nacchi's -"
Something in Ai visibly snapped as she grabbed Reina's shoulder with her other hand and squeezed tightly. "You don't have the right to call her that anymore Reina. Now tell me, who lead the raid?"
"It wasn't a raid!" Reina yelled with a squeak of pain. "I had nothing to do with it, and even if I did, I doubt they would clue me in on a hostage situation. I don't have that clearance."
Eri let a small gasp escape her lips. "Hostage?"
Ai stood there for a little longer, with both her hands looking as if they were about to lunge for the other girls' throat. After closing her eyes and taking a step back she let go. "I'll believe you for now, but next time I ask to see you, don't send Risa or I'll come looking for you myself."
Reina didn't look overly impressed by the threat but she didn't say anything in response, instead she decided to make a run for it. When she was out of sight Eri turned her attention back to Ai only to be given the shock of her life.
"You can come out now Eri." Said Ai staring directly at her. Eri let out a sheepish laugh and stepped out from behind the bush fearing the wrath about to be unleashed.
"I'm sorry, I shouldn't have -"
Ai shook her head and dropped to sit on the slightly damp grass. Eri stood awkwardly before she decided to sit down as well, positioning herself next to Ai.
"I should be the one apologising, Eri." Ai began tiredly. "You shouldn't have needed to spy, I should have told you what was going on from the beginning. I suppose I was just a little wrapped up with... everything."
"What exactly is going on Ai? I still don't understand."
"Nacchi... she's a really important woman. I've known her for years, she's like an older sister to me and I'd do just about anything right now if it would help her." Ai sighed loudly. "Nacchi is my... our leader. She was part of the team that started the Others and has been a driving force ever since..."
Ai didn't speak for several minutes and Eri was having an internal battle as to whether she should prompt the other girl into speaking again. In the end she didn't need to
"She has a daughter."
"What!?"
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EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEH!??!?!??
:mon wtf: :mon wtf: :mon wtf:
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ohhh! Things are getting interesting. :D Keep it up I like it so far. Stories like this always interested me and since Eri's center of attention I like it even more. :)
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It's been months since I updated this fic. I'm sorry for that, but I've been distracted by a hundred different things that eventually ruined my will to write this story.
Reading it back after a few months of hiatus helped me realise that I had something here and would like to pick it back up - but currently it's jumbled and I'm not looking forward to the headache that would be reacquainting myself with my train of thought when I was writing it the first go round...
What I'm really saying is -- This fic is being re-written to what will hopefully be a better standard.
So, look out for it. It'll be under a different title and the chapters should be longer and less headache inducing.
I'm also keen on having some reader input, so if there's anything/one you'd really like to see in the new edition feel free to tell me.
Officially restarted as The Red Heart
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Oh ... I was reading your fic a few months ago and I LIKED IT SO MUCH.
The vampires are very creative and cool , is a good story and I want to read more chapter .
Keep Going :D
I really want to see the new editorial ! *-*