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The Hello! Project Fanfics => H!P Fanfics => Crack-to-Go => Topic started by: writerjunkie on April 05, 2009, 12:10:05 AM
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Title: My Everything
Notes: I have the love scene into detail but I want to make sure it's all set and ready to show everyone. Once it is just ask for it and I will email it to you. =)
“Ai, we have to talk about this!”
I rest my head against the bathroom door and sigh. I’ve screwed up big time. I never meant for this to happen. It’s all a big mistake. What will happen between us? What if everyone finds out and Tsunku-san hears about it? It would be the end of my career. I don’t want to leave Morning Musume! I like it. Then there will be a huge uproar and I’ll be all over the papers. It’ll be a disgrace. Things aren’t looking good. Everything is going terribly wrong. I close my eyes tight and focus on my breathing to try and get rid of these frightening thoughts. Everything is going to change now. Risa bangs on the door again, rapidly. I open my eyes and step back. I really don’t want to talk right now. I want to run and hide never to be heard of again.
“Go away! It’s bad enough as it is, Risa.”
“Ai, if we don’t talk it’ll get worse.” The knocking stops.
“There’s nothing to talk about! We were drunk it’s nothing but a mistake.”
There’s a sudden long pause. I’m such an idiot! Can’t I learn to think? I unlock the door and step out. Risa stands in the middle of the room silent. I have to say something, but what? There’s no way I can make things right now.
“Risa, I’m sorry. I didn’t mean to,”
“Don’t say anything, Ai.” She snaps
Her eyes shine with disappointment and sorrow. I lick my lips, nervously and look to my feet. What else should I say? This silence is unbearable.
“Risa, if we continue this something bad is bound to happen. My career is really important to me you know?” I take a deep breath and sigh. “And I…I hope we can remain friends.”
I know this is the last thing she wants to hear and I have no idea why I said it. Its just instincts I suppose. She doesn’t say a word. Instead, she cries. Her face is stained with tears. Her shoulders sink and her body shakes. I can’t help, but feel guilty seeing her like this. I can’t lose her as a friend! We’ve been through so much together. I can’t let our friendship end. It’s just as important to me as my career. I walk over to try and give her some comfort. I don’t touch her though. I’m afraid she might snap if I do.
“Gaki-san, please try to,”
“Get out.” She says, in the faintest voice. My eyes open wide in shock. I’ve never seen her this cruel.
“I’m sorry I,”
“I said get out!”
She starts hitting my chest and pushing me. I have no choice but to leave. I make a dash for the door and go into the hotel lobby. It’s a good thing I got dressed in the bathroom first or else I would be in the hallway naked for everyone to see. Who does she think she is any way? She can’t kick me out of my own room! But it’s just happened and here I am. I shouldn’t be mad at her though. She’s hurt and it’s all because of me. And I’m not sure on how to deal with both this and our disappearing friendship- a friendship that’s lasted for eight years. There’s so much at stake right now and I just might lose everything. Why did I have to be so drunk last night? I can’t remember a thing. I remember buying a few drinks with Risa and we went to my room after, but that’s all I can remember. My mind goes blank after. Then the next day; BAM I wake up naked with Risa in my bed also naked. I just can’t seem to wrap my mind around that still- some morning to wake up to. It just might get worse further into the day. I walk down the hall in pain. My body is so sore. It’s covered in scratch marks and hickeys. Marks Risa left behind. My body shivers at the thought of her hands touching me and caressing me. I managed to cover the hickeys on my neck with make-up thankfully. I could use some rest though. I’m all worn out, but where do I go? I got thrown out of my own room. I continue to wander down the hall with no idea on where to go. And on top of that, I keep picturing Risa kissing me in places where the hickeys are left behind. Ah stop that!
“Hi Ai-chan-whoa! What the hell happened to you?” Reina asked
I jump then blush and look down embarrassed. Don’t ask me questions!
“It’s kind of hard to explain.”
“Are you ok?”
“I’m fine, just really tired.”
Please don’t ask any more questions. I’m in no mood to talk or answer them. I have too much crap going on right now. Between Risa and my own ever-growing questions about what’s going on is making my head about to explode.
“I can tell. Your bags have bags and your hair looks like it got in a fight with the hairdryer and it won.” She frowns “Maybe you should do back to bed.”
“I can’t. I kind of got kicked out.”
Don’t ask about that either! Her face scrunches up in confusion then she sighs and shakes her head.
“Whatever, I won’t ask. Look, if you need a place to sleep you can use my room. We got a whole week off so I’ll mostly be at Eri’s place with her and Sayu.” She hands me the keys
“Thanks.” I take them and head to her room
When I get inside I slap my forehead. We have a whole week off?! That means there’s no way I can avoid Risa. The girls will want to go out with us. If I say no they’ll ask questions. Ah! I’ll worry about that tomorrow. I really need to sleep. I flop down on to Reina’s bed and sigh. I almost instantly go to sleep. I’ll worry about everything tomorrow.
***
Who ever knew a whole week could move so slowly! It’s torture! I was able to stay away from Risa for two days, but the third day everyone is catching on. Since we’re best friends we’re around each other a lot so they’re use to us together talking and laughing. And things got even fishier to the girls when Risa denied Eri’s offer to come have dinner at her house later on tonight with Reina and her. Risa stays in her room almost all day and when she leaves, she has on this expression as if she’s broken. My stomach turns and twists every time I see it because I know it’s there from me. I don’t do anything though. I just hide and ignore the fact that she’s hurt. I roll on to my side and glance at my alarm clock. It’s only seven and I’m already in bed. I can’t sleep. Her scent is everywhere. My whole bed smells like her. It’s a sweet and soft fragrance, but it brings such torment to me. It haunts me and taunts me. I close my eyes tight to try and sleep again. My head floods with a vision the second my eyes close.
“Ai.”
I run my hand up Risa’s stomach daintily, while my other hand travels down her stomach slowly with only one destination in mind. She pants calling out my name in pleasure, begging for more. For me to touch her in places I shouldn’t. And I obey. I explore her body and trail my tongue down pass her belly button to meet up where my hand is.
I open my eyes and look around me. I run a shaky hand through my hair and exhale. I lift up my shirt and trace a finger over the red marks on my skin. I can’t ignore her. She’s everywhere. She’s captured me and won’t let me go. She won’t let me forget. I can’t sleep. I have this strange feeling inside of me. This is sort of…a good feeling? It’s like I’m flying or overwhelmed with joy. I shouldn’t have such feeling in a situation like this. I don’t understand what’s going on with me. The pit of my stomach burns because of it, but not in a painful way. It’s pleasant and warm. I put a hand over my stomach to try and control it. I sigh and close my eyes. With my eyes closed I can feel the sensation more clearly. I close my eyes tighter as if that will make it go away. It just makes the feeling stronger. Dark images start to form. It’s faint and it’s blurry at first, but it gradually changes. It becomes more detailed and distinct. I see a form of a person. Then I can see a face, her smiling face. I can see her innocent eyes shining directly at me. My heart starts to race and I can feel myself sweat. I have this strong urge to…kiss her. I want to make her mine. I open my eyes, panicked and look around me. It’s all in my head. Risa isn’t here. It’s just a stupid dream. But I’m awake. Was I daydreaming about her? I don’t know if I should be happy about that or angry. I run a tired hand down my face. I shouldn’t be thinking about her. She’s my best friend. I turn to the ceiling to face another sleepless night. I don’t know when I’ll be able to rest.
***
Another two days of ducking and dodging. And I still can’t sleep. Everyone is worrying. They won’t stop nagging me with questions. Risa and I still haven’t talked and I’ve lost my urge to get completely drunk again. It looks like another night of mopping, but first I need a shower. I smell really bad like beer and smoke from the bar. I walk into the hotel and down the hall. I head to my room, but not without bumping into Risa. Oh just my night. We stare at each other for a while. The tension is thick and nerve wrecking. I know we should talk, but I really don’t want to. I want to avoid it for the rest of my life, but Risa will never let that happen.
“Ai, we have to,”
“Talk?” I finish for her
She’s silent again and I’m not sure how long this will be. I turn to my door and unlock it. I’ll do what I have been doing for days…ignore it. I can’t face it yet. I never can. I don’t want to remember the night we spent together drunk.
“I have nothing to say.” I say this so coldly it even surprises me. There’s no backing down now though. “I don’t want to talk about it.”
But I do! Ai-chan, I can’t pretend! I can’t forget what we did.”
I spin around and glare at her. I told her I don’t want to talk. That doesn’t mean she can scream what she wants to say about our night into the hall for others to hear. What’s wrong with her? She steps up to me and grabs my arm. I shrug it off and push her. She nearly falls. Can’t she understand?!
“I said I don’t want to.”
Her eyes flood with water and I go back to my door to open it. Everything inside of me feels like it’s torn up and burning. It’s like someone stabbed me.
“Go away Risa.”
I step inside and close the door, but something stops me. I go to see what it is. Risa has her foot in the doorway. Her face is still wet with tears. I feel myself become really angry and I open the door then grab her by the collar of her shirt. I yank her inside and close the door. I bang her into a wall while keeping my hold strong.
“What’s wrong with you?! Can’t you learn to leave me alone?! Whatever happened that night is pointless. It meant NOTHING. Do you hear me?! Nothing!” I shake her a few times to get a reply. She cries harder.
“You’re wrong!”
That isn’t the answer I want. She isn’t helping.
“It meant EVERYTHING to me.”
My grip loosens. I feel all these unsettling feelings awaken inside of me. She puts both hands over the hands clutching her shirt. My fingers start to shake at the touch of her soft skin against me. I let out a small breath. I feel my face soften to a scared expression.
“I’m in love with you.”
I let her go like I was just shocked by ten thousands bolts of lightening. I jog to my room. I can hear her running after me. Why won’t she leave me alone? This will do nothing. She has to drop it. Forget like I did. But did I really forget? Or I believe that I did. Am I tricking myself? I’m not in denial! I’m not. I’m very sure of myself in this situation!
“You don’t know what you’re saying.” I face the window to try and ignore her. “Two girls can never love each other.”
“I’m not a child anymore Ai! I know what I feel and I love,”
I turn around. “Don’t say it! Don’t EVER say that.” I sigh to try and calm down a little. “Do you have any idea how wrong this is?”
I go over and grab her shoulders. She flinches. “You’re my best friend. If this goes more than…whatever we have it’ll be the end of our career!”
She’s crying endlessly. I feel a single tear trickle down my face. I don’t know why I’m crying, but I am and I can’t stop it. I feel her body quiver, but the look in her eyes is unreadable. I stare at her to try and figure out what she has planned. And it happens all too fast. Her lips go against mine and we kiss, heatedly. My mouth opens and she takes full advantage to slip her tongue inside. It doesn’t surprise me. I thrust my tongue into her mouth and shift my hands to her waist. She taste like honey. This feels all too familiar. She moans and parts for air. I exhale slowly. I kiss her one last time and walk her to the bed. We fall back gently and I move so that I’m laying on my side next to her. I gaze into her eyes and wipe away her tear. I stopped thinking the second she kissed me. I let my emotions take over. I pour everything I feel into our kisses and simple touches. Maybe I am tricking myself after all.
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I fall back into my bed covered in my own sweat. Risa kisses my temple. I’m too weak to move. My body is limp. She joins me on the bed. She pulls the sheets up to us and cuddles against me. She gives a quick peck on my cheek.
“I love you Ai-chan.”
I look at her and smile. She can say that whenever wants. It just feels right to hear her say this. It makes me quake with joy. My tired arms wrap around her waist, firmly. She buries her face into my neck.
“I love you too.” I feel her smile into me. We lay in silence as I wait to get some of my energy back. I can barely talk. I take a deep breath before talking again.
“So…does this mean we’re dating now?”
She laughs and nods. I can accept that. Forget about how it’s forbidden. I’ll have to take the risk of getting caught. I can deal with the consequences later, because she’s worth it. She’s worth everything.
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TakaGaki! Man, you're just cranking out these awesome one shots.
What's this? A perv exists? I hereby request said scene. :D
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lol yep I'm feeling a bit creative. I'm glad you like my one-shots. They seem to be the only thing I'm good at writing. My chapter fics are ok, but my one-shots are my strong point it seems. I really love your work too! So I'm so glad to have a comment by you for one of my one-shots. Thank you. :kneelbow: And I'm done with the perv scene so I shall send it to you. lol =)
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You know you gotta hook me up with that perv, Junkie~ XD
My heart was breaking and singing with joy all throughout this story. :D So glad Ai-chan came to her senses and realized how real her feelings are!!!
EDIT: Perv was yum. :D
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lol yep I'm feeling a bit creative. I'm glad you like my one-shots. They seem to be the only thing I'm good at writing. My chapter fics are ok, but my one-shots are my strong point it seems.
I think your chapter fics are equally good! More TanaKame in the near future? :halo:
I really love your work too! So I'm so glad to have a comment by you for one of my one-shots. Thank you.
Lol, I think you might have me confused with someone else. I'm actually not a writer. XD Though I wish I had, I have no such skill. D: I leave the writing to people like you and other authors. :P (So I'm not responsible for symptoms like these--> :bleed eyes:)
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lmfao I think I did get you confused. hehe sorry. *blushes* Don't I feel stupid now? =P
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WOW writerjunkie.
Just WOW.
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wow ..... one of the best fic I ever read XD (no joke)
requesting the "extra" ... :kneelbow:
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No use trying to resist it. Aichan CANNOT deny da raburabu!!! :rockon:
Perv please. ^_^
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Loving this! :heart: :inlove:
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This is my favorite one shot of the month :D ... and the month is just beginning :lol:
A very good work in the characters ...!
I love Takagaki stories
^Requesting the pervy scene onegaiii!!!! :kneelbow:
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matte matte matte kudasai! :on redcard: :on redcard: :on redcard:
ne, is this only a one-shot??? hmp! :smoke: tis really a good story, i mean it! :luvluv2: all the drama thingy! haha.....and there it is again, the cool ai-chan! :luvluv1:
ne, how about making a story where ai-chan's the one chasing over risa....haha :wahaha:
more stories. author-san! :kneelbow:
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that seems like an interesting idea ayase. I might do that once I write out this one-shot I'm working on right now. And again thanks everyone. please look forward to my other fics in the future. =)
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Awesome TakaGaki one shot. I haven't seen enough good fics with this pairing, so this was a joy to read :D
Any chance I could have the perv?
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wow that was amazing I was like :luvluv1: looking forward to more of your fics.
(could i request the perv too)
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MY GAH!!
Like ALWAYS my dear Junkie =)
You made an excellente fic m (_ _) m
My respect to you... *o*
P.S: I want the "love scene" part xD
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amazing fic, the way you describe ai's conflict is amazing
good work!
looking forward to reading more of your works (:
.. and could i request the additional scene? XD
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:shocked awesome one-shot!!!
:kneelbow: request extra please~
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It will be a good Idea xD
It's always people who's behing Ai-chan o_O
But Ai chan have things easy xD no fair =3
I want a TakaGaki where Ai chan is looking over Risa and Risa made it difficult xD
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Title: One Step At A Time
“I’ll see you tomorrow.” I blush as I see Sayu grinning at me from my bed. “I love you too.” She snickers
I hang up the phone and pout at my smirking friend. That makes her smile even bigger. My face is flushed. I can feel how hot it is.
“Aren’t you and Gaki-san in loveee?”
I blush more and take a seat next to her. I lightly smack her arm then grab a piece of chocolate sitting on the bed in front of me.
“Stop it.” I whine
She rolls over on her side with her head resting on her hand. She has on this mischievous smirk. I don’t like that look. She scoots closer to me and I try to ignore her by staring at the flickering TV. It isn’t turning out so well. I can still feel her eyes on me as if she’s trying to burn a hole through me or move me with her mind. I grab the remote and turn the volume up. I cough and focus to the small lit up screen. Sayu nudges me, but I don’t move. She does it again. Eventually she gets tired of it and snatches the remote then shuts the TV off. I can’t win.
“What is it Sayu?”
She goes shy. She presses her pointer fingers together and pouts.
“Did you and Risa…do it?”
I fall forward off the bed in surprise at such a question. That was unexpected! I crawl back to the bed and peek over the edge.
“Are you ok? I didn’t mean to startle you. I’m just…curious. You’re around her a lot and we barely hang out anymore. So you have to have done it already like a hundred times!”
That is true. We’re having this sleep over to make up for lost time. I’ve been so busy with Risa for weeks that Sayu felt left out. So I took some of my time and spent it with Sayu for a change, but during that time I was with Risa, we haven’t done anything like that. I know Sayu’s my best friend and all but I don’t really want to talk about things like that with her. I nod and make my way back to the bed. I scratch the back of my head nervously and giggle.
“Sayu why are you asking me such a question?”
I’m blushing again.
“Oh come on. It’ll just be between us. I’m your best frienddd. It’s supposed to be a girls night out with just the two of us isn’t it?” She coaxes
“Ah…I don’t know Sayu. I think stuff like this should be kept between Gaki-san and I.”
I’m starting to feel uncomfortable.
“Come onnnn. Eririn!”
I shake my head. I’m not giving in this time. She sighs and sits up. She’s given up? I hope.
“Fine.” She grumbles
I sigh relieved
“Did you two make out?”
My eyes open wide. She laughs then grabs my arm and starts shaking me. She won’t give up will she?
“Eri, you had to have kissed her by now! You’ve been together for two months!”
“Ack…Sayu, stop it!”
She lets me go and I try to get my head straight from all the shaking. I sigh.
“Even Koharu and I done it countless times. This one time when we were in my dressing room after the concert we…”
“I don’t need to know!”
I’m getting horrible images just from thinking about what they possibly could be doing together in that room. I shiver. Out nasty thoughts! Sayu laughs.
“A kiss is a kiss. There’s nothing to hide about it, Eri.”
I fold my arms and shake my head. I’m not telling her this either. Nope. She can’t make me.
“I don’t kiss and tell.”
The room is silent, but Sayu’s dark eyes are still on me. I’m scared of what else she has to ask me. I don’t need things to become TOO personal. I gulp. Sometimes Sayu scares me. She has a dark side I never want to see. She places a finger under her chin as she thinks. Then quickly points a finger at me.
“You never been kissed have you?!” she declares
My mouth opens and I stare at her. I’ve been caught red handed. I close my mouth and look away. I feel like an idiot. I must seem so weird right now. From the way Sayu talks about kissing she must be a pro in that aspect. Her laughter brings me from my daydream. I frown.
“It isn’t funny!”
She doesn’t stop. She laughs at me for a minute then starts to calm down. She pats my shoulder.
“I’m sorry Eri. I didn’t mean to make fun of you.” She apologizes “So I’m guessing since you haven’t even kissed. You didn’t have sex either? What’s next…you haven’t held her hand yet.”
“We’ve held hands just never…kissed. Not even on the cheek!”
“Geez, talk about slow. I know you want to take your time and all Eri, but speed it up a little!”
“Well I…I’m waiting for the right time! I’m just…really shy.” I weakly explain
“This is too much Eri. It’s ok you know. I’m sure Risa wants you to do all these things with her.”
She’s right. I’m making a big deal out of nothing. I frown. Sayu rubs my back to try and cheer me up.
“Have you and Koharu have sex already?” I casually ask
It’s Sayu’s turn to be thrown off guard. She laughs nervously and blushes.
“No, she isn’t ready. Out of all the things we did she wants to take her time.”
I can understand that. I’m like that right now with Gaki-san.
“You and Koharu seem happy together. Do you love her?”
Sayu’s face goes red and she has on a large smile. I smile too, seeing how shy she seems at the mention of her girlfriend. She looks at me and nods.
“I do. I love her.” She easily replies, “She may do strange things, but I learned to like them. She’s…perfect.”
I embrace her into a strong hug. “I’m happy for you Sayu. I feel the same way about Risa. Except she doesn’t do strange things.” I chuckle
“Yeah that’s more like you. Whatever you do don’t try to convince her to have sex in a closet though. It’s just TOO weird.”
“Hey I wouldn’t do that!”
She starts laughing at me again. I have on this small smile and nudge her playfully. We back lay onto the bed. Sayu turns the TV back on and flicks through the channels. She finds a drama that’s showing and we start to watch it. I’m glad we’re done with all the questions about our relationships. But maybe I should take Sayu’s advice into consideration. Tomorrow…I’ll kiss Gaki-san!
***
“That’s a wrap everyone.” Our dance choreographer announces
Everyone walks to the side and gather their belongings. I sigh. I’m so tired! Dance rehearsal was intense. I can barely feel my legs and arms. I pull out my water in my gym bag and take a large gulp of water.
“Kame, are you ready to go?”
I turn around and see Risa, standing next to the door waiting for me.
“I’m coming.”
I throw my water into the bag and close it. I rush over to Risa’s side. She smiles at me and we walk out the door together. Now’s my chance! I shift my bag to my right arm and reach out for her hand. I put her wrist into a firm lock. She looks at me and I feel nervous again.
“I um…er…”
I don’t know how to start this. I’ll just go for it. I lean in to finally kiss her. She isn’t against it. So that’s a good sign.
“Gaki-san!”
I pull back quickly in a panic. Why now?! We turn around. It’s Ai. At least it’s her who finds us.
“I need to go over a few things with you.” She says
Can’t she talk about them later?! I feel the strong urge to frown, but I know that Risa has to do her responsibilities as sub-leader. I’ll never be able to kiss her.
“I’ll be right there.” Risa agrees, she notices my pout and pats the top of my head “I’ll see you soon, ok?”
I nod. She smiles and walks back to the rehearsal room. I’ll have to think of another plan. I walk down the hall. Maybe Sayu can help me.
***
Today’s the day! I shall kiss Gaki-san! Or intend to and maybe I shouldn’t be announcing it that way. It’s no big deal. But this whole week we’ve been busy with recording and filming our PVs. I couldn’t be around her any longer than a minute. But today…it’s different. It’ll change. Today we get to go out with our friends and we’re all going to a restaurant. What is it like a…triple date instead of a double date? That’s new. But it means since everyone will be couple-y I can be too with Gaki-san.
“Eri are you ready? I don’t want to be at the restaurant too late.” Risa ask
I look myself over in the bathroom mirror. I add on some lip-gloss and eyeliner. I brush my hair down with my hand a few times. I think I’m set.
“Kame?”
“I’m done.”
I exit the bathroom and join her at the door.
“Everyone’s already at the restaurant. Come on let’s hurry.” She says
I can’t wait! I’m excited. Nothing can go wrong.
***
“There you two are! Reina was getting restless. I think Ai has her under control now.” Sayu says, and then leads u inside the restaurant.
We walk to the back through a hallway and to some booth. There’s a thick red velvet curtain covering the entrance.
“Hey guys they’re here. You both better not be making out!” Sayu warns, before opening the curtain.
I look around to see if any one heard her. It’s a good thing we’re alone. I go inside and sit next to Risa.
“Where’s Koharu?” Sayu questions
“Bathroom.” Ai replies
“Finally you two are here! Can we order already?” Reina complains
Koharu comes back and sits next to Sayu. A waiter comes shortly and hands us menus. When I pick my choice of food and wait for our meals to arrive I plan everything in my head to get my first kiss from Risa. I’ve decided to wait until we’re alone, but since no one is all going to leave at once I’ll have to wait when we leave. I’m not sure if I can wait that long though! I sit impatiently in my seat and kick my legs.
“Kame, the food will be here soon. Just wait a little longer.” Risa says
It’s not the food that I’m impatient for, but she doesn’t have to know that. Our waiter comes back with our food and I sit up eager to eat. I quickly grab my plate and dig in.
“Eri wait it’s,”
“Ouch!”
“I tried to tell you it’s hot.”
I drop my chopsticks and cover my mouth. I burned my tongue. That really hurt. Risa laughs and takes my chopsticks then picks up a piece of meat and blows on it. She points the chopsticks at me and I open my mouth. I smile and happily munch on my meal. I lay my head on her shoulder.
“Remember to blow on it first and be more careful.”
I nod then go back to happily eating.
***
We stay at the restaurant for hours. We finally leave close to twelve. I go to the bathroom to wash my hands before leaving. I use the toilet first. When I get out I see Risa standing in front of the mirror checking her hair and make-up. I go over and turn on the faucet. Then press the dispenser for soap. It takes me a good three minutes to remember my plan. Why am I so slow?!
“I’ll meet you outside, Kame.” Risa tells me, before leaving
“Gaki-san wait!” I beg
I quickly rinse off the soap and rush over to stop her. She looks at me, curiously. I stand still, suddenly nervous. Things sounded a lot easier in my head. I should really think things through next time.
“Um…Risa I…”
How should I put this? I scratch my head.
“Eri, what’s wrong?”
“Risa, can I…”
Someone bursts through the bathroom door and it hits me, sending me falling forward. I automatically reach out to grab Risa. She comes forward to break my fall. This feels like it’s some type of anime. It’s a little weird. The next thing I know, I fall into Risa’s arms and our lips touch. My eyes open wide in total surprise. Risa has her arms around my waist, comfortably.
“Oh sorry Eri.” I hear Sayu say
Well I did want her to help me. Just not this way! The door opens and she leaves. I’m still in shock. I’m over that in a second and I jump back a good two feet in the air. My fingers rest to my lips where we just kissed. I didn’t want our first kiss to be like this! I wanted it to be romantic and…expected. Not by an accident.
“That wasn’t supposed to happen! This is all wrong.” I shout
I start to pace and tear from frustration.
“Eri what are you talking about?”
I ignore Risa and walk back and forth, mumbling to myself. Now our first kiss is ruined! Two hands grab on to my arms and spin me around. Risa looks at me concerned.
“Why are you upset?”
I sniffle. “You’ll think it’s stupid.”
She gives me an assuring smile. “Try me.”
“I…I wanted our first kiss to be special. And now…”
Risa caringly wipes my tears and holds my hands.
“That’s all?”
“Mhm.”
“You don’t have to worry Eri. We can try again.”
Huh?
“But it already happened. We can’t get another first kiss.”
“You’re right, but let’s make the one now not count.”
“You would do that for me?”
“Of course.”
I wipe the last of my tears and sniffle again. She’s so kind to me. She knows just how to make me feel better. I smile. I link our hands back together and Risa steps forward. I move up to her and meet her lips with mine. This one isn’t so much of a surprise. It’s tender. I close my eyes. It feels like I’m in heaven. The kiss is over and I rest into her arms to let this sink in. I have the hugest smile on. I rest my head on her chest.
“I love you Gaki-san.”
She giggles and strokes the back of my head.
“Met too Kame.”
We stand there for a while in each other’s arms. I did it. I made it to the first step. I don’t want to rush to the next one though. Not for a while that is. I pick up my head and look at her.
“Gaki-san, can we have sex later? MUCH later.”
She gives me a strange look. I laugh. She doesn’t know about the talk Sayu and I had days before. I shake my head.
“It’s nothing.”
She puts a hand on my face to catch my attention. I start to get lost in her soft brown colored eyes.
“I can wait. We’ll go one step at a time.” She promises
I plant a kiss on her cheek.
“Thank you.”
This night went better than I thought.
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Dude, I love stories like this. XD
You had me at:“Did you and Risa…do it?”
Can't believe I'm saying this but I think Eri was thinking too much. :D Gotta go with the flow with this kind of thing. :yep:
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While I was reading this, I was... :on lol: then :luvluv2:
Love this GakiKame!
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“Gaki-san, can we have sex later? MUCH later.”
XD Eri really vocalizes her thoughts! *snickers*
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One Step At A Time
Quest to kiss Risa = :wriggly:
Actual first kiss (the one with bunny help) = :nya:
“Gaki-san, can we have sex later? MUCH later.”
:on lol:
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Hahaha, this was too CUTE! Gaki really needs to teach Eri how to KISS...Keep It Simple, Stupid. Just DO IT. :D
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My everything
yay Takagaki <3 .
I realy like the way you wrote it, their actions seemed very realistic and in character .
I know it's kinda late but i'm also requesting the perv :twisted:
One Step At A Time
Ahh i just adore shy and innocent Kame, and devil Sayu picking on her for not kissing the person she's been dating for two months.
If their first kiss, took that long, would their first time take about ,hmmm.. 8 chapters :roll:
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One Step At A Time is totally entertaining to the maximum level, made me XD :lol: :w00t: :rofl: :roll: :inlove: :wub: :grin: :on lol: :hiakhiakhiak: :hee: :wahaha: :mon fyeah: very well done :mon thumb:
My Everything while reading it, it's like I'm having this self-torture thing ritual which happens to be one of my favorite pastimes, reading sad stories that is :grin: I felt my heart was like being squashed, ripped and scattered. :twothumbs
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Title: My Goodbye Letter
This isn’t easy for me to say and the last thing on my mind is that I end up hurting you, but I hope you can for once be your levelheaded self and try to understand why I’ve chosen this path between us. It wasn’t an easy decision. You mean the world to me. You are my pride and my joy. You always have been. I know this is hard and I never wanted it to end this way. We were supposed to stay together until the end. Don’t think it’s the end now. I still love you. If only our lives weren’t likes this. If only they were different. Then maybe we could still be. We could finally be together and be in love. But it isn’t and I’m sorry my promise was broken so soon. I tried to keep it as best I can. I’ve fought for as much as I could. And I’m probably showing how weak I am by leaving you this letter instead of telling you myself in person this is over. I just can’t face you. I can’t stand to see you cry. The last thing I want to see is your sad face rather than your joyful and lively one. I want to remember you by your vibrant smile not your painful face shinned with tears. Please understand and let our love for each other live on through our precious moments we spent together. Let our memories still carry on to help you make it through the day. Keep them because one day I will return back to you. I will come back and claim what’s rightfully mine. I’ll never forget you. Please tell me you’ll never forget me either? I’m sorry it’s the end of our relationship. I promise I’ll come back to you. So long as you still love me I will come back. As long as you show I still have a place to stay and a part of your heart I will return. And that’s a promise. I love you Gaki-san. Goodbye.
I stare at the letter, feeling my eyes brim with hot tears. I place a hand to my mouth to contain my cries. I can’t believe this happened. My chest is aching and my heart is breaking. A tear drops to the sheet of paper staining it and I dab away any others ready to fall. I place the paper back to my dresser. My throat is tight. My lip quivers. I exhale sharply.
“Ai-chan.”
Please don’t take too long. I’ll wait for you.
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WHERE AND WHY DID AI-CHAN GO?!
:cry: Poor Gaki-san....
One Step At A Time
:shocked
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HOW DID I MISS THIS STORY?! :angry: :angry: :angry:
*reads again and calms down*
Aww, GakiKame in one of their purest forms :wub:
Eri is so cute being sooo slow XD I wonder if Gaki-san was impatient....
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T______T that letter almost makes me cry :cry:
the hell ;_;
Gaki - san will waiting 4ever T_T
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Title: My Goodbye Letter
:pleeease: :pleeease: :pleeease:
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:ptam-hbk: :OMG: :gyaaah: :pleeease: :on cloudeye: :on speedy:
Gaki, hold on~~
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:stoned: where did ai-chan go?!?
:farofflook: hold on gaki-san!!!!
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OMG, you mean I didn't comment in this thread? *disbelieving* I think a punishment is in order don't you think? One week of not reading any of your fics. NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO that will be Horrible!
I'm so sorry I didn't reply here sooner. My memory must be failing me XD
I think you should know how much I adore TakaGaki and KameMame so each time I read fics with them it just makes my day. If you're the writer is makes it ten times better :)
Ok let's see...your latest TakaGaki fic made me break out with cold sweat! I thought you killed Ai or something. Glad that Risa is still waiting. It shows how important leader is to her :heart:
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where the hell did Ai-chan go?! :P
i don't really feel bad for Risa. AI will be back ryt? as long as she still loves her. and as long as Ai would be back soon. :)
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lol lil Hamz it's ok if you don't comment right away. haha I forgive you. *hugs* You're always so busy it's ok. lol I'm glad you commented now. It's good enough for me. =)
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Title: On The Brink of Insanity
WARNING: Character death!
I bet you’re wondering why I’m here, right? Well…to tell you the truth I don’t think I belong here in the first place. I don’t belong cooped up like some rabid dog. I don’t belong in a small room that I can barely move in and I don’t belong locked inside left to stare at white tile walls and flooring for the rest of my life either!
Because between you and I…I’m damn near normal. No…I’m not near. I am! I’m normal! What’s a matter?
Why are you so scared? I won’t hurt you. Come back and join me.
All right…I’ll take a seat. Sorry about that…I guess I kind of just lost my temper. Yes, my temper and not my sanity. Then again you type of people don’t think I’m sane and neither do my parents, or those damn police who can’t learn to come on time to a crime scene!
But who are all those people to judge me?! Who’s to say…what’s normal? Or...what’s completely crazy and worth losing your mind after a traumatic event? You know…don’t answer that.
I’m not here to have my questions answered. And you’re only here to evaluate me. Or something like that, right? What’s that? Oh, you’re here to hear my story is that it?
Well, listen right now, will you? I think its way too late for someone to sit and talk with me.
Well…if you insist. Ah, I don’t know where to start. What exactly do you want to hear, doc?
You don’t mind me calling you that do you? OK, good. Let me see…my psychologist always tells me to talk about how I got in this state, so I think I’ll start my story there for you.
It’s all I got. I hope you don’t mind. It started when I was in my third year of college.
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“You and Gaki-san are still fighting?”
I look up from my bowl of rice and stare at Eri from across the lounge table. Reina is next to her giving me a concerned look too. I push my rice around the bowl subconsciously.
“Last night we couldn’t talk without yelling to each other. Then I had to sleep on the couch. I never noticed how uncomfortable it was.” I sigh and sink into my seat
Things between Risa and I are worse. We can’t talk to each other or even look at one another. I don’t get why she’s so bitchy. What have I done wrong again to get the silent treatment? Her birthday didn’t pass and our anniversary isn’t until another month. I don’t get her! Maybe we’re changing. Things aren’t working out so maybe that means we should…
“Don’t give up just yet.” Reina cuts in
I blink and focus my attention back on to my two friends. I almost forgot they were here because I’m so deep in thought. I nod and put on a tiny smile then go back to sulking in my rice. How can I get on Risa’s good side without setting a quarrel off? That’s tricky.
“You’ll be ok Ai-chan. I mean look at Sayu and Koharu. She drives Sayu up the wall more than you can imagine and they’re still together. Just don’t take it out on yourself like rip your hair.” Eri suggests
“Or your eyebrow.” Reina chuckles
I give out a little snort and put my chopsticks down. I sigh and hit my head against the table. I rub the back of my head furiously. I let out an aggravated cry. This sucks. Everything was going fine, but we had to hit this ditch and I just can’t seem to get out of it. How can I make this work again?!
“Ai-chan, if you think harder you’re head will explode.” Eri giggles
I pick up my head and pat down any hair my hand ruffled. I run a hand down my tired face and exhale. I hate this so much.
“Hey guys!”
“Koharu shouldn’t you be with Sayu to help move her things into your house?” Reina asks warily.
Koharu takes a seat next to me, flashing her perky smile. I wish I can smile too, but things are getting harder to keep my smile from staying. Koharu frowns and scratches the back of her head to think.
“Yeahhhh…in a minute. I saw you three here and I thought I should check on the Takagaki drama.”
I turn to her and raise my brow. “You gave us a name?”
“Yep, I also gave Eri and Reina one and Sayu and I.” She admits, proudly
She’s a strange girl. I shake my head and look back towards my hands.
“So how is it?”
“Bad.” I grumble
“Well…you know you could just go up to Risa and beg for her to forgive you and put on your best puppy dog eyes.” She offers
There’s no way that will work. I chuckle at the suggestion. I look back at her. She seems serious about doing it too.
“Why? Has it worked for you with Sayu?”
“I’m about to find out.” She jumps out of her seat
“Did you over sleep again?” Eri asks, slightly annoyed
“Yep, I didn’t mean it though!” She cries
Reina laughs. “Good luck trying to avoid that. You better go before she gets too angry.”
“I’m confident she can not resist my Koha charm! But I really have to go. Ai-chan, a simple I’m sorry can work too you know. Bye!” Koharu waves her goodbye then runs out the lounge, quickly.
I stand up and leave my stone cold rice at the table. I’m not hungry anymore.
“I’ll just go home. I’ll see you both tomorrow.” I say
“Ok, see you later, Ai.” Eri sadly agrees
I walk out the door and my face looks down towards my feet as I walk. Should I really consider Koharu’s idea? Or maybe Reina and Eri’s? I’m so desperate I’ll take anything right about now. But at the same time I want to make sure it’s the right choice. Whatever I’m done thinking. My head is starting to hurt. But things don’t end there. Along the walk to our house I just so happen to run into Risa. I feel nervous and unsure. We stand off to the side to talk, but I have no idea what to say. I tuck my hands into my jacket pockets and look anywhere, but her. I scratch the back of my neck.
“Um…hi?” I whisper, “Are you…going somewhere?”
“I’m going shopping. I’ll be back late.”
“Oh…ok I’ll just…be home sleeping or doing homework.” I look at her and sigh. Her face looks like she’s waiting for me to say something. I don’t know what. “Be careful ok?”
“I have my cell. If you worry just call me.”
“I will.”
We go quiet again and she goes to leave.
“Risa.” She turns around
I go up to her and put a hand on her, timidly. And I’m not sure if I should kiss her or not. I just go in and place a light and quick peck on her lips then let her go. Even kissing her feels like I’m doing something wrong.
“Hurry home.”
She smiles and I nod at her. Then we go our separate ways. I’m an idiot. We keep drifting apart, but I don’t know how to get us back together. I don’t understand how this could have happened. I don’t think I’ll go home. I’ll have a few drinks first.
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I didn’t come home until twelve that night. I’m not drunk just a little tipsy. I did a lot of deep thinking rather than drinking. I did sulk a little too. I find my way back easily on the walk. I could have got a cab, but walking helps me cool down sometimes. By the time I reach the apartment and get to my apartment door I realize something is wrong. I open the door and something just doesn’t feel right. There’s this intense and eerie feeling in the air. I flick on the living room light, but no light goes on. I’m still in total darkness. I don’t remember it being like that. The light bulb couldn’t have gone out. I changed it this morning. It’s still fresh. What’s going on? Taking a gulp of cool air, I quietly step inside and close the door. Someone has to be here. I can barely see. As I walk I stick out my arms to feel around me.
“Risa?”
There’s no reply. She has to be home. The malls don’t stay open this late. And she always sticks to her word. Things are getting fishier. If she isn’t here, where is she?
“Risa, where are you?”
The kitchen light goes on, suddenly. That has to be her…right? I’ll have to go see. Slowly, I walk towards the dim yellow light. She must be there. Who else would be here?
“Risa, this isn’t funny.” I scold
What am I doing? I shouldn’t be yelling at her. I should be making things right. I go over my thoughts I had at the bar. Time to put them into use.
“Risa look…I’m sorry…about everything. I don’t like arguing with you and I don’t want you to feel that I hate you because I don’t. I love you…so much and I…I want to make everything ok again, alright?”
She still isn’t saying anything. What’s wrong with her? Is she that angry? I take a few more steps into the kitchen and what I see I never would have expected. It throws me completely off guard. Risa’s tied to a chair with duct tape stuck to her mouth. She has a few bruises on her face and her hair is disheveled. I stare at her frozen in fear. I have no idea what to do. She looks at me with tears in her eyes, begging me to get her out of here. I still can’t keep up to react though. She looks behind me and tries to scream pass the tape to tell me something, but it’s too late. I feel something heavy and hard strike the back of my head. I fall flat to the ground. My head burns in extreme pain. I roll on to my back to see what it is that hit me. A tall and bulky man stands over me with black sinister eyes. He smiles menacingly at me. He lifts up a wooden bat to hit me again. I’m in too much agony to move and he thrusts the bat down, hitting me in the face and everything goes black.
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What’s going on? Where…am I? I can’t tell. The pain blocks out my ability to think or move. It’s dark. Hold on a second. I open my eyes just a little and it makes my head throb like sharp needles are stabbing it over and over. I close my eyes and it stops a little. I have to know here I am. I brace myself to face the light again. My muscles go tight and quickly I open my eyes, and then look around me. This is my kitchen. Am I alone? I have to get out of here. I need to get help. I go to run out, but I find myself stuck in place. Then I see why, I’m in a chair tied down with a rope from my torso to my legs. Risa! Where’s Risa?! I have to get her!
“Ai.”
I turn my head around so fast my neck cracks. Across from me to the right Risa is tied to a chair too and her face is decorated badly with cuts and blood. Some look fresh others are crusted with dry blood. Was she like this when I was gone?! I feel my stomach turn. Who knows what he was doing to her while I was away! And the thought of not coming here soon enough to save her kills me inside.
“Are you ok?” she asks
She always looks after others first rather than herself and even in this situation she sticks up to that. I need to get us out of here. I thrash around in my chair, hoping it would break something to set me free. It’s pointless. I slump forward tired. There’s no way we can leave. We’re stuck.
“Risa I…I’m sorry.”
If we’re going to die I might as well tell her what I need to. I need to make amends between us.
“I…you mean the world to me and…and,”
“I know Ai. I forgive you.” She speaks so comforting to me
I can tell in her voice she’s scared and she’s smart enough to know it’s the end for us. But we both won’t to tell each other that. I start to cry. I don’t care who hears me. I weep and I let my defenses go down.
“We have to get out of here!” I scream through my tears “This can’t…I have so much I still want to do with you! So many things to tell you!”
I lift up my head and see a single tear trickle down Risa’s face. She looks at me with despair, but she still keeps her smile. And though her smile may seem lively and cheery, it’s true meaning behind it is broken and hopeless. Streams of tears fall down her perfect face, but there’s still no sound. There’s nothing.
“I’m not giving up! I’m not going to let him touch you! You hear me?! I’ll protect you.” I scream
I move around violently, desperate to break free to comfort Risa and run to safety. I groan and scream out as I move. They’re yells of frustration. And no matter how much I try to escape I’m getting nowhere. I feel like a mouse stuck in those sticky mousetraps. I can scream and move all I want, but I’m not going anywhere any time soon.
“Ai!”
I look into Risa’s honey brown eyes and stop moving. I put my hands down to my sides. She’s right. It’s useless. This is ALL useless!
“I’m sorry.” I sputter,panting heavily. The crying has caused my breath to become uneven. “I’m sorry I can't protect you. I can’t save you.”
And I finally accept that cruel fact and it pains me. From the darkness the tall man I saw before enters the kitchen. He stills has that smile on his face. But this time it’s much bigger. He’s excited. The sick bastard! He better not touch her or he’s dead! He looks at me then back at Risa and walks over to her. I move forward in my seat.
“Don’t you touch her! I swear to god I’ll kill you if you do!” I threaten
He laughs and strolls closer to her. Risa whimpers and closes her eyes. I watch him with such hatred. His thick greasy hands go on her shoulder and she jumps. Then he cups her cheek, softly.
“Leave her alone damn it! Stop it!”
He spins around, angrily and pulls something from his back pocket. It’s a roll of silver duct tape. He gets a long piece and puts it on my mouth, then does the same to Risa. He goes back to her with a wolfish look on his face. He’s staring at her like she’s some type of meat. He parts her legs wide and slides his hand down her thigh. He pushes her skirt up and chuckles. No…ah this bastard! No! I hear Risa muffled screams from behind the tape and I close my eyes. But I can still hear it. I can still her the things he’s doing to her. I’ll never forget those sounds. They’re stuck in my head forever.
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For hours I hear this! I had to…see what he was doing to her. And each time it felt like something inside me was dying. It was like my insides were getting pulled apart. I couldn’t take it. This was something far worse than death.
Then hours later when day was slowly creeping pass the dark, he cut Risa free. He pulls her out of the kitchen and into the bathroom. I’m not sure what he’s going to do, but I think I’m next.
He comes back shortly and cuts me free then takes me to the bathroom too. I think I know why he’s brought us here. He’s going to kill us. He throws me in and I fall a few inches away from Risa. I quickly get up and face him.
I’m not scared of him. In fact, I’m enraged. I want to make him pay for those things he did to Risa. He stand in the door way and pulls out a knife from his pocket.
Risa lets out a scream and that’s my fuel to give me my courage. I grab whatever I can and throw it at him. I pick up a hair dryer and toss it. It hits him in the head, blinding him and I rush over, tackling him to the ground.
“Go Risa, run!” I scream
She rushes out. I follow after her, but she grabs my foot, sending me to the floor with him. I turn around and try to shake him off. He picks up his knife to try and cut me.
“Get off me!”
“Ai!”
Risa comes back and starts kicking him. She stomps on his hand several times until he lets go. I scramble to my feet and pull Risa with me. I get to the door and undo the lock. I didn’t expect him to be up so quick.
“Ai, look out!”
Before I can see what’s going on, Risa pushes me out of the way and I fall over. I look back and see this large knife sticking into her side. From where it is I’m sure it punctured a lung or maybe her heart. She falls down to the ground, too weak to stay up.
“No!”
The guy runs out the door, but I don’t bother to chase him. My eyes are transfixed on the girl before me. I crawl to Risa’s side and stroke her face. She’s breathing heavily. She’s surrounded by so much blood it’s everywhere. I’ve never seen this much blood before. She coughs a few times to try and stay up. I start to cry and hold her close to my chest. I can’t think. This isn’t real. A part of me thinks this is all a dream that I’ll wake up and she’s ok. And she doesn’t have that knife into her side. I’ve shut down.
“Risa! Risa please don’t…I love you…please don’t leave me!”
I dip down to give her one last kiss. Her mouth taste like blood and I can feel how quickly she’s slipping. Her hand cups my cheek. I end our kiss and look into her dull eyes. The life dwindling inside them is slipping. She smiles at me. I cry harder.
“I love you, Ai.” She wheezes
I hold her hand and watch her. She keeps smiling at me to try and tell me not to worry, but I know she’s afraid too and in a lot of pain. A single tear slides down her cheek and I brush it away.
“Close your eyes. It’ll be over soon.”
“I’m scared Ai.” She admits
I try to control myself. I have to keep it together. She needs me right now. I need to show her everything will be fine even if it’s not the truth. I’ll lie to her to make her feel better. Just for right now.
“I know. I am too. Rest.”
She closes her eyes and I feel her heart slowly come to a stop.
“We’ll meet again. I promise.”
I place one last kiss to her warm lips and she sinks into my arms, lifeless. And only then do I cry. I scream out in both rage and agony and I don’t care who hears me. I cry until I can’t cry anymore. My yelling draws attention to the neighbors finally and it makes me wonder where the hell where they when all of this was going on?!
Couldn’t they have called the police sooner?! Then Risa wouldn’t have been dead. Pretty soon the cops are here. And I know having them find me here covered in Risa blood isn’t looking very good for me.
I’ll be the main suspect. When they get here I don’t allow them to touch her. I even use the knife that killed Risa to get them away. I lash at them each time they try to get too close.
I don’t care where I cut them as long as they get away and leave me with her. I know if I let them take come close they’ll take her and I won’t be able to see her again. I don’t want that.
I want to die beside her in peace. I want to die and I don’t care how I get it. They can shoot me all they want. They would be doing me a favor. And after that I…lost it. I haven’t been the same.
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So, now you see my side of the story. Believe it if you want. I don’t really care if you think I’m crazy too. Join the club.
I still don’t get why you came to me to hear my story. You must be a really bored man to sit with me. I’m glad I can entertain you with my troubled life. What is this some type of drama for you sick enjoyment?!
Sorry, I didn’t mean to yell. I’m fine now. I hate it here you know? Everyone treats me different and they say I’m…unstable. But hey maybe I am.
I mean I did try to kill myself a few times while staying here. Now the nurses watch me like some little lab rat. They treat me like some child. I hate that too. I’m twenty-two for crying out loud!
But I suppose they have their reasons. I’ll let you in on a little secret. The reason why I tried to kill myself is because I can see her. I can see Risa and she’s calling me. She’s telling me to come with her.
She wants me be with her. To finally meet her like I’ve promised. I hear her sometimes too you know. She tells me things.
Yeah, you can look at me that way if you want. Maybe I am crazy after all. But I don’t plan on leaving this place any time soon. I think I’m stuck here. This is my own prison.
I’ll just go back to my room now. I have no point in staying here any longer now that my story is told. I still think one day I’ll meet her. And when I do I’ll be the happiest person in the world.
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Wow! That's... sad but wonderful! (I'm a sadic... :sweatdrop:)
I want to know why that man killed Risa. :tama-mad:
The final part is incredible! :cry:
You are great, Writerjunkie! :twothumbs
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RISA NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!
:frustrated: :frustrated: :frustrated: :frustrated: :frustrated:
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this one-shot is worth being comment twice!! :wub:
just jaw-dropping amazing detail and feeling! like i literally wanted to just go in there and kill that >> man
it's so sad that before ai and risa were fighting :( and now this... T-T
can't wait for ur next story~
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God, this is the 3rd time today something made me cry. I should have resisted the urge to check the fic thread XD
No matter cuz for Junkie it's all worth it. I wanna rip that crazed man apart for doing this to TakaGaki. Poor Ai is left alone in this cold, cruel world :cry: I like how you kept Risa smiling throughout all the horrible things she went through just to comfort Ai. *sniff* That's true love.
Ack...I'm being mushy again ain't I? :P
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Risa T_T
I'm broken :cry:
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Man you make me cry this time! :cry:
I think I need a hug!
Poor Gaki-san why in all the fics she must be murdered/raped/dead!!
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@ lil_hamz- sorry I didn't mean to bring out all the angst. lol it's alright to be mushy. *whispers* I am too. *looks around* you didn't hear it from me though! lol
@Mikoto- *hugs* is that better? lol
@Haruka- I'll try to make the next one less dark.
@JFC- Lol speechless too?
@Liben- ohhh new reader?! I hope you enjoy my fics. =)
@lonewind- my writing isn't that good *blushes* I'm glad you like it though
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Man you make me cry this time! :cry:
I think I need a hug!
Poor Gaki-san why in all the fics she must be murdered/raped/dead!!
*Hug* Easy MIJA T_T
I'm still wanting a fic where Risa mades difficult the situation for Ai.chan xD
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lol don't worry I'm going to make that once i get an idea. =)
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Wahhhh!!! :cry: :cry: :cry: Dammit!!!! She...she.....noooo!!! :cry:
Good story though, even if it makes me sad. :P
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HELLZ YEAH THEN xD
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Title: The Start of Love
“Hey, what’s a matter?”
“…”
“You don’t have to be so scared you know. Are you new?”
“…”
She giggles and smiles at me, kindly.
“You have to speak sometime. What’s you’re name?”
“K-Kamei Eri.”
She laughs again and I can’t tell if she’s laughing at my last name or me. A lot of people tend to poke fun at my surname where ever I go.
“That’s really you’re name?”
“Yes. You think it’s funny don’t you?”
“No, of course not. Why are you standing in the corner like that by yourself? It makes you look weird.”
“I like to stand here. It calms me down.”
She looks at me lost. I feel stupid. I shouldn’t have told her that. Now she’ll leave like the other students who approached me.
“You’re strange.”
I look to my feet and lick my lips, nervously. This is the longest conversation I’ve ever had with someone. It’s a little hard to get used to. Most people just avoid me or I avoid them. I wonder why she’s decided to stay.
“I-I’m sorry.”
“You don’t have to be sorry. You did nothing wrong. You don’t have any friends, huh?”
I shake my head. I’ve been here for a few days and I still haven’t got a friend. Maybe they’re all scared of me? Or don’t like me. Am I really THAT strange?
“Me either.”
I find that hard to believe. She seems very talkative for someone who has no friends. Someone like her should have tons of friends. She looks outgoing and she speaks her mind more than me and I envy that of her.
“Let’s be friends?”
I look at her in astonishment. She wants to be friends with me? But didn’t she just find me weird? Who would want to be friends with someone weird? Let alone talk to one. She doesn’t seem to care though. I still can’t believe what I’m hearing. Friends? She smiles at me and holds her hand out. She’s serious! I feel a small smile form on my face. I want to shout and jump with joy. But instead, I nod in agreement. I take her hand and walk out of the fence corner of the schoolyard. My first friend since I came to this school.
“What’s your name?”
“ Michishige Sayumi! The cutest girl you’ll ever meet.”
She lets go of my hand to put two peace signs next to the top of her head. “Usa-chan peace!”
I laugh at her. She’s a little bit of a narcissist too? She fixes her bangs and her pigtails. When she’s done I hold her hand again, missing the warmth she gives off. We walk towards the main entrance. School will start soon and I’m actually looking forward to it.
“You’re a lot better than talking to pill bugs.” She says
Now it’s my turn to give her a bewildered look. She might just be strange like me after all. I’m going to like having her around. She smiles again and there’s something about her smile that makes my heart beat faster. It attracts me to her. I never noticed how pretty she is either. I’ve never had these feelings before. What is this? My stomach feels tight and queasy. My skin feels hot. Am I getting sick? No, that’s not it. Wait…I think I’m…in love?
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Aww... that was probably the cutest thing ever! :wub:
Ever since I heard about Sayumi talking to pill bugs it's been at the back of my mind that I wished she had a friend to talk to back then even though the image of her and the bugs is pretty cute. You wouldn't think a girly-girl like her would play with that sort of thing.
Awkward!Eri and Pill bug!Sayu has to be one of the best images to written. Ah, if only this weren't a one-shot. KameShige just works. I think it's my favourite Kame pairing. Thanks for this, writerjunkie!
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hehe thanks. Well i do have a few KameShige fics, but I haven't posted them here. I'm not sure if they're any good. lol I'm glad you liked this one-shot. I might make a story like this, but right now I have way too many stories on my hands that need to be finished. So I won't start a new one just yet.
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Love how you incorporated that both of them were alone/introverted as kids. xD Very nice.
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You made them belong for one to another *o*
I really like the perspective that you have for Kamei, very shy and introverted.
But I know she has a wild side xD
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aw so nostalgic XD reminds me of their first year of MM XD
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so cute~ pill bugs. lmao. XD
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Title: The Start of Love
Man, I've been trying to cut down my sugar intake.
:wriggly:
“You’re a lot better than talking to pill bugs.” She says
For some reason, I can totally picture Sayu saying that with a perfectly straight face. XD
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KAWAII~~~~ :inlove: I forgot that Sayu didn't have many friends. I still find that as hard to believe as Eri does. :lol: Love this one-shot though, the beginning of a beautiful friendship/relationship. :heart:
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Title: Possession
I kiss the base of her neck, delicately. A soft moan is let out despite her plea for me to stop. She can’t lie to me. Her no’s are silently yes’s, begging for me to touch her, to stroke her in places she’s never had anyone touch her- until I did. By her heavy breathing and half lidded eyes I can tell she enjoys this more than she lets on. I’m not letting her go. She’s trapped. She’s my toy, my perfect little puppy. She lets out another breathy cry and licks her lips, slowly, almost teasingly, even she’s not aware of how seducing it is. How luscious her lips look every time she bites them or licks them, coating her mouth to look moist and kissable. She’s so innocent, but not anymore when I’m through with her. And I know she’ll let me corrupt her. She’s more than willing to let me claim her curvy body as mine. I kiss the dip of her jaw line and wrap my index finger around the choker dressed on her neck.
The thin necklace of leather fits well on her slender neck. It makes her more endearing. The others might not know it, but this is more than some necklace. It’s a piece of jewelry, marking her as my territory. She’s my property. Only I can touch her! They think it’s just something she’s grown fond of, a favorite accessory of hers, but it’s so much more. But that’s our little secret. She’s required to wear this. Or I like to believe so and like the good little puppy she is, she obeys. It’s her choice. I demand her to wear it, but I never threaten her. She can easily disobey, but she doesn’t. She wears this band at her own free will. My finger traces along the silver ring of the necklace and over the diamond design at the sides, only the best for my girl. I lean in, pressing my body against hers, pushing her further into the bathroom wall. Not her place of choice, but I’m feeling needy and desperate, now. I knew she wouldn’t oblige. She likes this just as much as I do. I run my nose along the side of her neck, nuzzling into her and flick her earlobe with the tip of my tongue.
She lets out a small moan and puts her hands around my waist for support. I feel her sink closer to the ground. I’ll need to hold her. I want to do this while standing up. She’ll have to bear with what I’m about to do to her. She has to remember I’m in charge, not her. With one hand, I slid her back on to her feet and tie my arms around her hips to hold her. I nip at her ear and she lets out another yelp.
“I saw you.” I whisper
I can see goose bumps beginning to form over her skin to my words. A heavy breath is let out through her mouth.
“Does she know you belong to me?”
“F-Fujimoto-san,” She whimpers, “She just,”
“Don’t lie to me.”
With my other hand, I grab her face and turn her towards me. Her lip quivers partly in fear and partly in excitement. She will never tell me that, but I know. I know all the signals she does. She can’t lie to me. I know all her tricks.
“She likes you. She’s touched you.” Rage flickers within me
She’s silent and licks her lips again-her nervous habit. I watch her tongue as it runs over her bottom lip. I want so badly to kiss her, but that can come later after I’ve straightened out this threat about my pet being taken away from me. That comes first.
“Miki, Reina hasn’t done anything to me. I promise.”
“But she likes you doesn’t she?”
She puts her head down to her feet. “Yes.”
I pick up her head to make her look into my darkening eyes. “You’re mine.” I state
“Yes.” She agrees
She’ll say anything to cool my temper, to make my pleased. I like that about her also. Always trying to please me trying to stop my tantrums. I kiss her. Our lips touch lightly, but she cries wanting more. She’ll always want more. She can’t have enough of me. Enough of what I do. She likes it. The hand on her face travels to her shirt. I brush my thumb over her stomach a few times and go up to fondle her breast. She likes that too. When I’ve had enough groping her breast I go down to her shorts. With one hand, I pop open the button and pull down the zipper. She yanks down the shorts herself to her knees. I put my fingers in to her light blue underwear and brush my finger over her sensitive area ever to so gently.
“Miki.” She cries, her eyes roll to the back of her head and her back arches off the wall
I grin. I lick the pulse point of her neck; with my other hand I grab her neck. It’s a firm hold, not too hard yet not soft. She can still breath and speak. It doesn’t hurt her. I kiss her mouth, but again softly and she lets out a disappointed cry. I like to tease her. I like to see her squirm. I like to hear her beg. I put two fingers in her underwear to her opening and she lets out a different cry. It’s a good one. We’ve never got this far. I’ve only pleasured her with my tongue many times, but never with my hand. I know this will hurt her for just a second, but I still don’t want to inflict any type of pain on her, but I’m going to have to if I want to do this. I take my hand out and she sighs
“Take this off.” I point to her panties
She doesn’t hesitate to listen to my command; in a flash they’re off and on the ground with her shorts. Even this submissive she’s still so cute. I’ll give her reward now. I dip down and kiss her, passionately. Her mouth automatically opens and her tongue seeks mine. Together we tangle our tongues driven by passion, thriving on lust, hungry for one another. I’ve never felt such fire burn inside me before like this. The need is becoming painful and I can no longer control my actions. The sudden urge to tear at her clothes seems like a lot more logical. I push her back when I need to breath and together we let out a long held in breath. She moans when my fingers dip an inch inside her heating core. I smirk.
“So cute Kame-chan.”
I kiss her lips one last time and thrust my finger inside her. She lets out a sharp cry and grabs on to my arms while she sinks forward. The hand around her neck leaves and strokes her hair as she rests her forehead to my chest.
“Shh, it’ll stop hurting in a second.” I whisper
I feel her hips thrust into my hand later and she starts to moan in ecstasy instead of agony. Her posture changes, she now stands up, her head thrown back as she moans. I take the offering and bite onto her neck, putting hickeys to her creamy skin. I love hearing her moan and I love it even more when it’s me who’s making her cry out like this. The way she calls out my name or holds me. It makes me feel like I’m her world. That I’m something important to her, in her eyes, I matter. Her hips rock against my hand, eager to get more of me into her. I bite her neck and she yelps. I know I’ll leave a red mark there and she’ll have to wear a scarf or turtleneck shirt to hide it later and I know she’ll scold me, but I don’t care. That doesn’t matter right now. I enjoy doing things like that to her body. I love doing things that show she’s mine. I’m sure she still has a nice pair of scratch marks on her back and thighs from weeks before, they’re mostly gone, but ever so often I’ll give her new ones and she’ll let me. I add a second finger and she screams. Shit! She’ll draw attention to us if she doesn’t stay quiet. I put my hand over her mouth, signaling her to remain silent. She nods, understanding and gives one last cry into my palm, until there’s no more. I put my hand down and pick up the pace in my wrist. I’m feeling a little rough today. I grab her butt as she thrusts against my fingers. Her face is flushed, her hair is messy, and her lips are swollen. She looks so hot- beautiful. Her innocent face covered in sweat, covered in our sweat, our love. I’ll never get tired of seeing that.
“Miki.” She groans
I stroke her cheek, encouraging her to have her release. I want to see her face as she’s overwhelmed with pleasure and the sound she makes, is sexy. I scrap my nails against her cheek; welts are left in its wake. I dig my nails into her back and bring my hand down her back, slowly. She cringes, too busy to tell me to stop. I see her sinking forward, her legs gone weak. They’ve turned into rubber. She’s almost there. I pump my fingers in harder, coaxing her to let go. Then I feel it. Her muscles spasm against my fingers and she yells out, I watch her fall into me, gracefully. Perfectly. We stand in silence; the sound of her labor breathing is the only thing heard around us. She’s limp. Her body spent. I enjoy doing that too. Bringing her body to its peak and she’s left both exhausted and satisfied. Only I have the power to do so. I pull my fingers out and lick up the juices left behind. So tasty, the flavor is unique and addicting. I want more. I’ll always want more no matter how many times I’ve had it. She shifts in my arms and looks at me, a small blush creeping in her cheeks. I lick my fingers clean, slightly upset that I’ve ran out. I can’t have more; it’ll have to be for next time. We’ve stayed in this bathroom for too long. The girls will start to look for us. I’ll also need an excuse as to why we’ve taken so long to return. I can just come back and not say a thing. They won’t ask the question twice to me. They know better. They’re all afraid of me anyway. Yep, I like that plan better. I think I’ll stick to it. Eri starts to collect her clothing and put them back on, hastily. She looks in the mirror to fix her hair and make-up, trying to look decent for the public eye. When she’s done, I lock her against the sink and wrap one arm around her waist. The other clamps to her neck, keeping her stuck in place to look at me through the mirror. She gulps. She must see the intensity in my eyes as I hold her. There’s no telling when I’ll strike or when I’ll become suddenly violent. I’m still very unpredictable to many girls. Not just Eri.
“Remember Eri, you’re MINE. No one can touch you. No one can make you feel as good as I did right now. Understand?” I growl
She moans. I chuckle. I always knew a large part of her enjoyed this. She likes how I make her mine. How I handle her in such rough ways. She must like being used, just a little. I kiss her cheek, tenderly and let her go. I motion for her to leave first. I stand in the bathroom, looking at myself and smiling. I can’t hide the wicked grin on my face; I can’t stop thinking about what I just did either. I know I have her. I’ll always be stuck on her mind. She’s under my spell. Reina will never have her. She will never be this good. Every inch of Eri belongs to me. I’m not going to let her go. No one is going to take her away from me. She’s my toy-my little pet. And I know she’ll come crawling back. They always do.
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Oh my, that was....scary and hot at the same time. XD Mostly the latter but at times, Miki was making me shiver. But at least she was fairly gentle with Eri~ :wub: I kinda the all the power that Miki has though.... :oops:
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XD
Miki-sama : :onionwhip:
Kame-chan: :on freeze:
Though poor Eri... who would have though she was into S&M XD
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GOOD FIC!!!! :twothumbs
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Long time no-posting T_T
I really like this fic , it was really sexy (Miki-sama punish me~ xDD)
Poor Eri I don´t want been S(well maybe a little :twisted: )
I really do Love your fics :oops:
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Title: Possession
Oshit...
:mon blood:
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Title: Closure
NOTES: This is a fan fic request I saw on JPH!P by KonaKaga and I decided to give it a try. Sorry it took so long because I wasn't sure if i should take this request since it was kind of old and I had some problems writing it. I still think it needs some fixing up, but here you go anyways.
“What happened? What did they say? Gaki-san!”
I don’t know how I can say this to Eri with out hurting her. I don’t think I cannot hurt her even if I didn’t wanted to. I won’t lie and there’s no way working around it to say this nicely. I stay silent to think of a better way to tell her. I’m stumped. Her mind is probably going a mile a minute as she waits for me to say something. She can’t take the suspense. She puts her hands into mine and squeezes my hand. I barely smile to her loving gesture that normally would make me feel better or calm me. It looks like it isn’t going to cut it today. She sees my lack of a smile and from that she knows something is wrong. She holds my hand tighter this time. She’s scared and I am too. I mentally prepare myself for the horrible news. I’m not sure if she can take it.
“They want us to break up and pretend this never happened or we graduate.” I tell her, in the nicest way I can.
What I said still has the negative effect on her like I vision. She’s devastated. Torn. Crushed. I don’t know what to do. I expected her to be like this, but it’s still hard to watch. She’s unhappy and I never want that. She bites her bottom lip then breathes out.
“T-That’s not fair! We can’t…we’re not going to break up, right?”
She looks at me to confirm her statement. And I wish I can, but for once I can’t. I won’t be able to. My eyes cast to the carpet of my room. I can’t face her. No one can make us end our love like this! It isn’t right! She latches on to my arms and shakes me to get some sort of a response. She wants me to look at her, but I won’t. I refuse to.
“Y-you want to break up with me?” Her voice cracks and I feel my heart break too
I don’t think she will understand how I’m trying to help her. I’m trying to save her from being shunned from the rest of the world. She wouldn’t be able to survive the wrath of the world or the publicity that will shoot through the roof if our relationship gets on the paper. It’ll most definitely be on the front page and the people will eat it up. We’ll constantly be questioned. We’ll become targets. Problems will spark and a huge wild fire will come after it. I just can’t have that.
“Eri, it’s the only way,” I insist, I don’t even believe half of what I just said
“No it isn’t! Gaki-san, I love you! And I don’t want to lose you.”
She pushes my face forward to have me look at her. Her face is covered with tears. My chest hurts. I knew this was coming too. It’s still just too painful. Her cheeks sparkle with the salty tears that paint her face. I grind my teeth to hold back sobs; I’m about to bawl. Why can’t this be easy? What else do I do without having to suffer? I stand and wait for Eri to yell at me- to beg me to make the right decision. She’s been still after she got me to look at her. All she does is hug me. She nearly knocks me over and I stumble at the impact. Her body presses against mine. Her arms go around my neck in a strong hold. I can feel her body quake and her hot tears damp my shirt. This is too much. What do I do? What can I possibly say to make this better? Nothing can be done. Nothing can salvage our quickly vanishing relationship.
“Please, don’t leave me! Risa, don’t leave me.” She chants
Her painful plea breaks me apart and I fell my tears fall instantly. I put my arm around her curvy frame and my right hand brushes through her smooth locks. Kame- The only girl in my life, my only weakness, my beautiful angel…I’m sorry to be the one to make you fall.
“Tell me this isn’t the end?”
I remain quiet. Maybe if I don’t say it she’ll be less sad, because a part of me doesn’t want to hear it either. We know it will happen, but we’ll avoid it. We won’t speak those dreaded words. It’s becoming harder to breath. I hate this. I can’t express how much. She moves back an inch to see my face. Her cheeks are flushed and her nose is red from all these unnecessary tears. Yet you’re still so beautiful, Kame. You’re always beautiful.
“Gaki-san! I need to know! Tell me!” She implores
I finally cry and breathe out slowly. There is no point in avoiding it. It’s in our faces. I never break eye contact like I did before. I’ll have to say it. I’ll admit it not only to her but also to myself.
“I’m sorry, Eri.”
And that’s all I can say. She knows what that means. She can put the pieces together. I break down. She falls to her knees and I follow after. Whatever she feels, I feel it too. I always can feel what she does, somehow we're connected. And that brings us closer. Right now I'm not sure if it will. I hold her and take her hand. She’s so torn. She barely could form words.
“It…I…we were…it isn’t fair!” is all she can say
“I know. I know.”
I close my eyes. Thousands of tears come out from my closed lids. I’m glad she doesn’t have to see this. I don’t want her to see me break down. Because I’m supposed to be strong for her, I’m the glue to keeping her stable. All I can do is agree with whatever she has to say. I’m useless. I’m a horrible girlfriend! I can't protect her! I can’t save us.
I’m sorry. I never meant to clip your wings.
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From there on it’s been hard for me. And Eri isn’t any better. She smiles less and barely talks. I think it also has to do with how cold everyone is treating her. Sayu doesn’t talk with her and often avoids her as well as the rest of the group. It’s like she’s the freak of the group. Ai-chan treats me the same way. We’re both alone. Shunned by the people we’ve grown so close to. I’m starting to think if this is worth it. Should I have chosen the graduation than this? Rather than satisfy the agency and the fans? I’m so unhappy and so is Eri. I’m tried of people treating us like we don’t exist or we’re not worth their time. It feels like I shouldn’t have the right to exist because I fell in love with Eri. Why isn’t Ai here for me when I need someone right now? I walk into the room we share to try and catch up on lost sleep. I haven’t been sleeping well for over a week and I barely eat. I’ve lost weight dramatically, everyone knows. They don’t say anything though. They don’t care. No one cares anymore. When I needed to get my room changed Ai had no problem rooming with me. I’m surprised she agreed, because no one else would. I thought she had agreed because she got over the fact I was dating Eri and wanted to make our friendship work again, but I was wrong. Nothing changed. We are just two sudden strangers sharing a room. She’s in the room when I enter, but like always she’s silent and she ignores me. She looks at me ever so often, but that’s it. Today is different. When I’m done getting dressed and get into bed, she speaks.
“You shouldn’t have broke the rule.” She says, coldly.
She turns away from the mirror of her dresser and I stand frozen in shock that she spoke to me in so long. We room together, but it’s like we’re two completely different people living together, so we never spoke- until today. Her eyes seem full of disappointment and anger.
“I don’t get why you didn’t listen. Now you’re left to suffer.”
“I knew the risk. I knew how bad things could get.”
“Then why did you continue it? Why did you even date HER?”
“Because I love her.”
I mean those words with my heart. I mean them more than I’ve ever meant anything else in my entire life. I don’t regret saying them either. Ai frowns and faces away from me.
“Would you have been happier if I dated a boy?” I growl
“It would make you at least look decent on the papers.”
I’m furious. This isn’t the Ai-chan I know. What’s wrong with her? What happened to my best friend? Who is this person? I can’t stand her! My jaw goes tight and my teeth press together, grinding.
“So you’re against me because I just so happened to find love with a girl?! You of all people I would have thought you would understand.”
She chuckles. “Well I don’t. I’m done talking to you goodnight, Risa.”
She goes into bed and I’m left furious. Is that what everyone thinks? That I’ve made the hugest mistake of my life? That I’m some piece of trash on the side since I feel for a girl? Am I cursed now for my choice? I don’t think so. If this is what everyone thinks then I wonder if Eri gets the same feeling. All I can think about is Eri and if she’s getting treated the same way as me. I get into bed too to try and sleep, despite the cruel words I’ve just received.
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The following day while walking to the lounge I spot Reina in the hall talking to someone. I can’t see whom since she’s blocking my view. It’s probably one of the girls. I don’t think much of it though. All the girls here talk to each other in the halls about latest news, PVs, singles, albums, or dances. That’s nothing new. I walk closer, paying no mind until I get within earshot of the conversation.
“You’re better off just leaving Morning Musume. We don’t need people like YOU around. You make us look bad. I’m surprised they even let you stay! It’s not like your loss will effect us.”
I stop and put together whom she’s talking to. I can hear sniffling and sobbing. She has some nerve! She’s no better than us, picking on Eri like this. She won’t get away with this! I turn around.
“Shut up Reina!” I scream, “Quit being such a bitch and leave Eri the hell alone before I make you!”
She glares at me and folds her arms in a challenging pose. I’ll make her think twice before saying such things to Eri. I’ll make her regret her words! She’s already suffering from our break up and now this?! Unacceptable! Reina rolls her eyes and scoffs.
“You’re not worth my time.”
Then she walks away. I hurry over to Eri to see if she’s ok. She holds on to me the instant I’m close to her. She’s in worse condition than me. Her face is pale and her eyes are puffy. She can’t hold up by herself.
“Gaki-san, I can’t! This is too much. I don’t want to do this anymore.” She mumbles into my neck. “Everyone hates me! I don’t want to go through this.”
I feel the urge to cry again. Only she does that to me. She can only bring a reel of emotions inside me and they often get the better of me. Keep it together. There's no time to fall apart. She needs me. She's in her weakest form. Ok. If that’s what she wants then that’s what she’ll get. I hug her tight to comfort her.
“Ok Kame.” I agree "Ok."
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I spoke to my manager after that incident. I couldn’t get it out of my mine. It bothered me constantly. I had to straighten everything out once and for all. So I made a meeting with my manager and we had a long talk on my decision. He wanted to make sure I was doing the right thing. He was not only looking out for me, but my career too. He knew the risk and results if I chose to graduate and to be honest I was more than sure on my choice. I knew this was the right thing, not for the fans or the public, but for me and for Eri. He tried to talk me out of leaving at first, but my mind was set. There was nothing that could be said to persuade me. So it was settled after an hour of talking things through. I left the boardroom when we were done and I was so tired. The conversation was draining, but I still had one more thing to do. I had to see Eri. I’m on my way right now to give her the good news. I don’t know if she’ll be awake since it’s late. But I don’t want to wait. I have to tell her now. I’ll just have to see if she’s asleep when I get there. The walk isn’t long. The meeting room was close to her room. When I see her door come into view I speed up my pace and knock on the door a few times when I get there. It’s silent on the other end. Maybe she is asleep. Should I stay here? The door opens seconds later, answering my question. I stand up straight, nervously and frown when I see her face. She looks horrible. She's a mess. My chest wrenches at the sight of her state of health.
“Gaki-san?”
I gulp, at a loss for words at her condition. I’m sure she hasn’t been eating and sleeping looks like she hasn’t had any in weeks. She wipes her eyes and sniffles.
“What are you doing here?”
“Can I come in?”
She motions for me to enter. Her room is messier than normal. Her bed is undone. The place is trashed. Has she stayed awake in bed all night? What has she been doing? She must have given up on everything. I hope she hasn’t done anything to herself! She’s smarter than that! I take a seat on to her bed. While trying to keep my cool. She joins me with the same grave face as before. She was probably in here crying. She’s suffering so much. I need to put a stop to it.
“It’ll be ok Eri.” I say, not really believing the words myself
It will probably be ok for now, but for later I have no idea what will happen to us. And that’s a scary thought.
“No, it won’t. How can you say that?! Don’t you see what’s happening? How can you still remain positive? Look at me Risa! It feels like I’m…dying.”
She cries again and I hold her like I always have. I know she can’t take anymore of this. She’s lost. I lie down on the bed and bring her with me. It brings some comfort to her. Her crying has stopped for a second. We face each other while lying on our sides. One hand is tucked under my head for cushion. I stay here and watch her cry. She’s still so beautiful- so defenseless yet still stunning and able to capture my heart. That will never cease to amaze me. Still an angel that anyone would be lucky to have and I’m glad she’s mine. In my heart she’ll always be mine. And I’ll always be hers. I speak when her crying is down to sniffling and uneven breathing. She’s still trying to keep things together.
“We’re going to be ok now, Kame. We’re going to graduate together. This is all going to stop.” I whisper
Her tear filled eyes lock with mine and I see a small sparkle form. And in a very long time I get to see her happy self again. Her happy smile. She’s filled with life once again. She isn’t lifeless anymore. Her sorrow can end. She’s relieved and I am too. She shifts closer to me. I put my arm around her waist. I can feel her breath against my neck, tickling me. Her body sags down from all her stress and emotional baggage she’s been carrying. She can rest now. She can finally close her eyes. I smile. For once I can help her. I no longer feel useless and helpless. I can do something! We can finally be at peace…together.
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:( :cry: :fainted: :fainted: :O :oops:
Those were the emotions I went through when reading that :cry:
Man, you rock Junkie! (Can I call you Junkie? :huhuh)
That was so sad :gyaaah:
Somehow the line that sticks in my head the most is:
“Ok Kame.” I agree "Ok."
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yes you can call me that. Just about any nickname is fine with me. =) I'm glad you enjoyed the one-shot. :D
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Owie, my heart hurts now. :cry: I mean, the ending was happy-ish but reading the way everyone treated them was agony.
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Eri = :gyaaah:
Risa = :mon waterworks:
JFC = :cry:
I take only take comfort in the fact that this is an obvious AU story (because we know that the other members wouldn't/couldn't be THAT coldhearted).
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Title: The Most Precious Gift
I don't know if this will work but it's worth a shot. I don't know any other way to talk to her. And it seems that the more she's away from me the more awkward our talks to each other get and that's not supposed to happen when you're dating someone. I don't get why she's become so distant. She's been like that ever since we had sex which was a month ago so for one whole month we haven't talked. We haven't done anything together. She's just given me the cold shoulder and it doesn't make any sense why. This makes me worry. Did I do something wrong or has something happened to her? I can't stand to see our relationship turn like this. I have to do something about this. I have to know how to fix it. I'm tired of being avoided. And I'm tired of panicking over what will happen to us. I'm going to put a stop to this. I'm going to clear everything between us. I hear the elevator to her apartment floor ding and I stand up straight away from the wall. I'm so nervous. My blood is rushing through my head and my hands are starting to sweat. I can't back down. I have to do this if I want us to be ok again. The doors open and my heart is racing off the scale. I'm scared and on the verge of panicking. I gulp back all these overpowering emotions to fighting the urge to gag. I've never been so scared to talk with her before. We've always been free and open to each other. I thought we worked out all our insecurities and doubts. We've been dating for months, but now with the way she's acting it's hard to tell if we have a relationship anymore. I look down the hall, waiting for her to step out and then to take my chance to race up to her before she notices I'm here. She might run towards the stairs if she sees me. I'm not sure, but I'm not taking any chances. I can hear heels tap lightly against the slick floor and my heart swells when I see her, standing completely in the hall, transfixed on her cellphone. She's probably reading the number of text messages I've sent her this past week. My phone bill must be so high sending those, but I could care less. Now is my chance to get her. I run through the hall and grab her arm. She jumps and lets out a scream, completely caught of guard.
“Ai-chan?! What are you doing here?! You scared me to death!” She wails, placing a hand to her racing chest.
“I have to talk with you.” My voice is stern.
Her eyes flash from fear to dread. She must have knew this was coming. We haven't talked in a little over a month. Would she think I would continue to let that happen? I love her. I can't just let this happen. She stares at me, frozen. I look at her, determined to get my moment alone with her. She can't turn me down, I won't let her. I tighten my hand around her arm.
“I need to speak with you Risa.”
“I...I can't Ai-chan. Now isn't a good time.” She mumbles.
She puts her head down unable to meet my gaze.
“Then WHEN is a good time Risa?! When? I have tried calling you all month but you haven't returned my calls or my messages. I don't even get a reply saying your ok. It's like you...don't want to be with me anymore. What have I done to upset you? Please I need to know.” I plead. “I have a right to know.”
“You wouldn't understand.”
I grab her shoulders with both hands in a strong grip. She flinches. Yeah so I'm mad, but who wouldn't be when the girl you're in love with just suddenly ignores you like you don't exist for a month! Mad would be an understatement.
“I'm not letting you go until we talk!”
I can see her visibly shake. She's never seen me this angry. I've lost my cool. I'm desperate and in pain from her sudden disappearance. I loosen my hold and sigh, controlling my anger and putting on a much calmer and nicer face. I shouldn't be getting this angry at her. I have to keep some control or else we won't be able to talk this out. I sigh.
“I'm sorry. I just...please let's talk about this?” I ask.
She nods, giving in to my demand. As if I would leave if she had said no. So I might be alittle stubborn, but I think I deserve an explanation. She walks down the hall, leading me to her apartment door. She fishes her keys out of her purse and unlocks the door. When the door opens I feel nervous all over again. I'm not sure what I to say. I haven't gone over it that well in my head. I was mostly sure that Risa would not allow me to speak with her and just leave or tell me to leave. But she's given in and now I have to figure this out before the conversation can start. We stop in the living room and Risa turns around, a little worried herself. It makes me wonder why she's this scared. I don't want to think too much on that because my mind will start racing and I'll think the worse possible scenarios. I need to keep it together.
“Would you...like something to drink?” Risa questions.
“No, I'm fine.” I reply, sharply.
Risa fidgets, trying to find the words to say something. Shouldn't I be the one doing that? Should I sit down first or stand? Screw it I'll just talk now.
“You've become so distant lately.” I start.
Yeah one whole month is lately. Her eyes shift to somewhere else other than my face.
“Do you have any idea how much you put me through? I don't understand, why are you like this?” There's silence. “You don't love me anymore? Is that it? I wasn't enough to for you?!”
“No, Ai-chan it isn't like that.” She responds.
“Then what is it Risa!? You have me scared. Do you want to break up? Couldn't you have thought of a better way to tell me instead of leaving me to suffer?”
My hands curl up into fist. I'm angry again, beyond what I can imagine. I don't think I can stay calm anymore. Risa turns away, her back facing me.
“You wouldn't understand.”
I reach for her arm and spin her around. I pull her close to me, locking our eyes together in an intense stare.
“Then HELP me understand! I don't want to lose the person I'm so deeply in love with.” I cry.
Her eyes start to tear and her free hand lifts up to her stomach as if trying to protect something precious to her. What is she so afraid of?
“I'm pregnant.” she says in a hushed tone.
What?
I let go of her arm as if I were burned. I take a step back. Am I hearing things? If I weren't angry enough before I sure am now. I grab the collar to Risa's shirt and shake her.
“You've cheated on me?!”
She shakes her head repeatedly. “N-no, I didn't!”
Tears shine her cheeks, but that doesn't stop me from losing my top. I can't believe her! After all I've done for her! What we've been through together she decides to mess it up by doing THIS?! She's betrayed me.
“Don't LIE to me Risa!” My grip closes tighter around her shirt. “Who is he? What's his name!?”
“Ai-chan I didn't cheat on you! You're the only person I've been with, I swear.”
She needs to STOP lying to me. This isn't making things better. She's just trying to protect him, isn't she? I'll find him eventually and I'll be sure that he won't be able to walk when I'm through with him. And that's if I've changed my mind to suddenly kill him first. I push Risa to the ground, too disgusted to look at her. She looks up at me from the ground, brokenhearted. I stare down at her, showing no remorse. I'm too heated to care what I've just done. She's broken my heart now it's only fair that I've somewhat broken hers. She expects me to buy this crap? I don't think so. Does she think I'm stupid?!
“When you're ready to tell me the truth you know where I'll be.” I growl. “Until then...don't even THINK about trying to speak to me. As far as I'm concerned...we're over Risa.”
I turn around, walking towards the door.
“Ai-chan wait! Please, I'm not lying! Ai-chan!”
Her soft crying as I march away makes me want turn back and hold her. It kills me to see that I'm leaving her like this. I love her so much. I don't want to leave her like this but I can't go back. My choice is set. She had her chance to tell me the truth instead of this poorly thought out lie. I can't forgive her. I want to but I just can't. She's hurt me, badly.
***
We haven't talked in two months. I didn't expect her to be this stubborn. All I want is the truth from her. Is that too hard to ask? I'm a mess without her. But how can I go back to her or trust her after what she's done? I can't just easily forgive her. What she has done has gotten to me. But even if I'm angry at her or hurt I keep thinking about her. I wonder how she's doing. Do our friends know what's happening? I shouldn't be thinking about this. I came out here to try and forget everything and yet even after two months I can't. I slouch onto the bar table and sigh. I motion for the bartender to come over and order a pitcher of beer. I've been doing this a lot when the thinking has become too much. It helps...sometimes and other times I drink until I eventually pass out at home. I have been refused a few times anymore drinks because I was too drunk. At least the bartender is nice enough to order me a cab and make sure I'm on my way safely to bed. I grab the pitcher handle the second it's given to me and instantly pour myself a glass all the way to the brim. Well...here goes to another drunk restless night. I slide the cup over and go to take my first swig.
“Don't you think you've been doing this enough?”
I put my cup down and stare at the man to my right. Who the hell is he?! He can't tell me what to do. I'm old enough to make my own choices! And if I want to drink until I lose all my brains cells or have alcohol poisoning I can! He can't change that. He isn't my father and even if he were it would not make a difference. I glare at him. He isn't afraid to look back at me despite my scowl and he even smiles. The smile is warm smile. As we stare at one another I take the opportunity to really look at him. He's tall, nicely dressed decked in formal clothing. He has to be the only guy here wearing suit. Clothes like this make him stand out like a sore thumb. He probably isn't from around here either, looking him over more carefully, I also notice that he must be much older than me. He certainly acts wiser. His hair is black and short, slicked back and neat not a single hair out of place. His eyes twinkle with a welcoming kind of shine. Why does he keep acting like he knows me. How can he know me when I don't even remember him? I have no slightest memory of meeting him. Is he stalking me? I turn back to my cup to continue drinking endlessly.
“Do you want your child to not grow up with a single parent?” He questions again.
I nearly drop my glass to the floor. Everything inside me ran cold flooded with dread. My body hunches over and my hands turn clammy.. Did he just say what I think he did? Slowly, I turn back to him, still trying to taking in what he just said. How does he know anything about me or my relationship? And most importantly...MY child? Or so Risa claims it to be my child. This man isn't a stalker he is some crazed man that belongs in the nut house. We lock eyes again and he has on the same cheery smile. What's there to smile about?! He's starting to freak me out. Is he messing with me? He's the father of that kid isn't he?! And he just came here to rub everything in my face. He has a lot of nerve coming over here to face me! I should kill him right where he stands. My hands tighten to fist while collecting together the pieces as to how he would know such personal matter. I want to punch his face in SO bad. He's ruined everything! He's come between Risa and I. Now I'll never get to see her. She'll even probably marry this guy. She won't let the child grow up fatherless. I feel my heart crush into pieces to this harsh fact. We'll never be together again. I feel tears quickly forming I bite my bottom lip to contain myself. I'm going to lose her. I'm going to lose the person I'm so in love with.
“Oh silly girl, I am NOT the father. You are.” The strange man corrects.
“What?” I croak.
“That child is yours. I only helped you make the child.” He explains. “I've chosen both of you to receive this gift. Don't you remember feeling a little strange during your date at that restaurant?”
As if I could forget it. It was our perfect date. Nothing had gone wrong. It had to be one of the happiest days for her. I have never seen her smile so much. They were special smiles only the type that would be given to me and it made my heart beat a thousand times faster. At the end of the night had left. Exiting the restaurant, we felt...different. I've had strong urges to kiss her and hold her. I was more...touchy to put that into a nicer term. Risa was even surprised then I was. I couldn't keep my hands off her and when we got home we...wait I'm starting to remember now. That drink I had ordered. I knew it tasted strange. And now that I think about I do remember seeing some older man looking at us, grinning as I drank the entire cup. I don't remember his face, but the smile I remember.
“That was you!?” I shout. “What did you do to me!?”
He lets out a small laugh. “Relax, I've done nothing to hurt you. I've only given you both something you wouldn't be able to make by yourselves. I don't normally do this, but I felt that you deserved it. The love you have for each other is quite remarkable. I've never seen one this strong.”
I don't understand. I stare at him, blinking, trying to process the latest piece of information. This isn't possible. There is now way. No way that I could have impregnated her! I don't have what is needed to make a child! Yet he seems so sure about this. This doesn't seem right. His eyes sparkle a mysterious glow. His smile is still intact, still soft and gentle. But that very smile is taunting me. He seems so sure of himself it makes this whole crazy situation believable. Have I somehow gone insane too overnight?
“Who are you?” I ask.
He lets out a light laugh. “That really isn't important. What you really should be doing is going back to that woman you love. She needs you the most.” He pats me gently on the shoulder. “Have a goodnight Takahashi-san.”
He walks away before I can get another word in. How did he know my name? What IS he? I turn back to my cup, staring and sulking. I'm not sure if I want to get drunk tonight. He's spoiled it for me. I can't drink this anymore. Why did he have to show up!? He ruined everything for me! But wait...that means he's not the father and if what he said is true then...that isn't right though! Something like this can't happen! It just can't! I push my mug filled with beer away from me and exhale. I don't know what to do anymore. I slip out a few bills from my pocket and place it on to the table before leaving. What am I going to do? Where should I go? I still can't believe this. I would have to see it for myself to believe it.
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“Ai?”
I rub the back of my head, sheepishly. I put on a shy smile and wave, weakly. This is the only thing I can do. This is the only thing I know what to do. I hope this doesn't fail me. It's the only plan I have.
“Hi...Sayu, is uh...Risa there?” I ask.
“Come in.” She replies.
She steps aside and I slowly make my way inside Risa's apartment. I didn't think Risa would have company over. But I think they would come even if she had not asked them. She had good friends who really care about her. Sayu closes the door and joins me in the living room. This feels all too familiar for me. I can still remember the fight we had. The words that were exchanged and the emotions that ripped through me are still fresh in my mind. As if I could forget them.
“Sayu who is it?!” Reina stops in the hall way and glares at me. “You.” she hisses, her arms cross in front of her chest. “What are YOU doing here? You don't belong here. She doesn't need you! Haven't hurt her enough?”
My jaw clenches tight together. I guess they do know about our break up. Then why did Sayu let me in?
“I...I want to talk to her.”
Reina chuckles. “I'm not letting you in that easily. Why don't you just leave?”
I can feel my arms shake. There is no time for backing down. I came here to make things right and that's exactly what I intend to do. Even if I have get through Reina to do it.
“It isn't up to you to say that I can't apologize. All I want to do is talk to her. I want to know from her that I can't see her again. You have no say in this, Reina.” I shoot back.
We stare at each other, hotly. I'm not moving. I'm not going to let her win and she isn't going to let herself lose. She's quite determined and I'm very stubborn. This could turn violent if none of us back down.
“Let her go Reina.” Sayu interrupts. “Gaki-san is a mess without her. Let them talk. Maybe they can work things out.”
“But Sayu,” She given a strong stare and sighs then steps aside, letting me pass.
I'll have to thank Sayu another time for letting me do this once I fix things with Risa. I can feel Reina's glare on me as I pass her, but I pay no attention to it since the only person on my mind is Risa. I walk to her bedroom, but the room is empty. Where else could she be? At least I know she's here. Her bed isn't made so she has to be here, somewhere. Down the hall I can hear mumbling and the sound of a constant flushing toilet. She has to be there. I follow the noise, not sure what to see when I get there, but I'm ready for it. I take each step carefully, scared as I draw near. This is it. This is where I'll know if I can fix things and have Risa back. I step into the bathroom.
“Gaki-san, are you ok? Maybe you shouldn't eat sushi.” Eri questions, patting Risa on the back.
Risa clings on to the toilet sink, gasping for air. She coughs several times and pushes back her bangs. I've never seen her this defeated. She's so vulnerable.
“I'll be fine Kame. It's just morning sickness.” Risa mumbles.
Her hand tiredly reaches up to the knob of the toilet to flush down the remains of her meal. Eri doesn't seem convinced. She pats Risa on the back some more to try and sooth her nausea. Risa takes a piece of toilet paper and carefully wipes her mouth then puts it into the toilet. The pregnancy is finally showing. I wonder if she's gain a large amount of weight too. A lot has happened in just three months and I've missed it. I can't make up for it but I can still be here for what's going to happen now. That's the least I can do. Eri looks up and notices me standing, fearfully into the doorway. She looks at me in shock as if not expecting me to never show up. Risa notices the change in Eri's behavior and turns around. I feel my body lock into place as she faces me, her face just as surprised as Eri's. We stare at each other in silence and Eri takes this as her time to go. She quietly gets up and dashes towards the door, leaving me finally alone with Risa. I slowly make my way to her and stand there, still silent.
“Hi.” I meekly greet.
She doesn't say a word. I look down to the tile floor. How should I say this? Would she get mad at me if I did tell her this? I hope not.
“Risa I...I didn't mean to leave you. I'm sorry. I...is it ok that...we can still be together again?”
The last thing I expected from her was to cry. I thought she would yell at me, throw things at me, tell me to get out and to never see her again but she wasn't doing that. She was crying. I don't know if its a happy cry or one that released her pent up sorrow, but that doesn't matter. I'll make everything better. I go over to her and sit next to her. I take Risa into my arms and hold her. I can feel myself starting to tear and I don't know why. Risa puts a hand to her face to hide her tears and I circle my arms around her waist, protectively.
“I'm sorry. Risa, I'm sorry.” I whispers, rocking her gently into my arms.
She puts her hand down and grabs my hand. I look into her tear filled brown eyes and sniffle to contain my own sobs.
“I know you don't understand and...I don't either but Ai-chan,” She takes my hand and puts it over her stomach. “I know it's yours. I don't know how but it's your child too.”
I kiss the top of her head and put my chin to her shoulder. I can feel my tears silently slipping down my face. What if it is mine? What will I do? Would I be a good mother? What should I do? Risa hiccups a few times through the silent, but I can see that she's calming down. Her breathing is becoming less heavy and more relaxed. Sleep is taking her over. She must feel so relieved now and I am too. I'm finally happy again. I stroke her hair, affectionately and sit there. I'm not leaving now wither this child is mine or not. I'm going to stick with Risa until the end. That's how it's meant to be.
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“Ai, relax.” Reina says.
I spin around to my group of friends, frantic. They're looking at me scared out of their minds, but not for Risa for me. I take a deep breath and wipe the sweat forming around my forehead. I think I'm starting to hyperventilate. Is this normal?!
“Relax?! Reina, I've been standing in this waiting room for over TWO hours! How can I relax?!” I shout. “What if something went wrong?! What if the baby is sick o-or Risa is in danger?!”
I start to pace around the room at a quick pace and my friends do nothing to stop me. They know how stressed I am and I'm sure nothing they can say will stop me from freaking out. But I think that's normal. I mean my girlfriend is in labor and I have every right to worry! Anything can happen in the delivery room! She could die or what if I lose the baby?! I don't want my baby to die! Wait...I can't be so sure if that child is mine. I'll have to see once the baby is born. Why won't it just come out already?! It would save Risa from all this pain too. I pick up the speed in my steps as I think about this and the possible outcomes, none which are exactly good. Please, Risa just be ok! Am I hyperventilating again?
“Ai-chan, will you stay still!? You're freaking us out!” Reina screams.
I stand still and turn to my friends, realizing they're still here with me. I let out a nervous chuckle and look to the title floor, embarrassed. I wipe the sweat on my palms against my jeans and let out a shaky deep breath. Right, I gotta stay calm. I have to keep cool. I hear the double doors to the emergency room open and I spin around scared all over again. Please let it be something good. I curl up my hands to fist, tightly. The doctor that came out, walks up to me with a neutral face. I gulp. My friends stand, staying close behind me to prepare for the news. At least it's good to know I'm not alone and that my friends are here in case something horrible does happen. It makes me feel only slightly better.
“Takahashi Ai?” The doctor ask.
“Yes.” I quiver.
“The baby has been delivered everything is perfectly fine. Niigaki-san would like to see you so you can go right in.”
“Thank you.”
I bow to the doctor and he smiles at me before leaving to attend to any other business that needs to be done. I guess I'm the only one allowed in, for now at least. I face my friends, still on edge and shaky to face what I might see when entering. They all smile at me. Sayu puts a hand to my arm and nods.
“Tell us if she's ok when you're done.” She says.
“Oh and the baby! Tell us about the baby too!” Eri wails.
Her excited behavior brings a brief smile to my face. “I will.” I agree.
I leave my friends and walk into the delivery room frightened. This is it. This is where I'll see if this child is actually my child and I no longer have to live in doubt. It's not that I don't believe Risa when ever she said it was mine all the time since she's been carrying it. It's just that, I need to see for myself. I don't want to be told something, I want to see it with my own eyes. I want to be the judge of what I'm about to see. As I go through the double doors I can see in the middle of the crowded room with hospital machinery and a single bed in the middle of the bed I can see Risa. Her eyes transfixed on the little bundle that's in her arms as she rocks to sooth the little baby tucked neatly inside the sheet. I've never been so eager in my life. I'm not scared anymore and the closer I get to the bed the more I want to see what this baby looks like, resting safely into Risa's arms. I've never seen such a cute sight before, until now. I stop at the railing of the bed and rest my hands on to the poles, attached to the small bed. Risa looks up, realizing I've showed up and she has this huge smile on her face. Her eyes light up with joy it makes my heart beat out of control. I feel warm inside with both excitement and happiness.
“How are you feeling?” I whisper, to not disturb the baby.
“I'm tired, but I'm glad all the pain and hard work is over.” She chuckles. “Do you want to hold her?”
I have the hugest smile on my face at the last words. “It's a girl?”
She nods. She holds the baby out to me and I can feel my arms shaking again to touch her. Ok, I just have to be gentle with her. I pick up my arms and get a firm grip around her then lift her out of Risa's arms. She squirms into my arms a little, scrunching her face as she stirs, but goes right back to sleep the instant she's securely in my arms. She's so beautiful. I look at her lost at what I'm holding in my hand. This has to be the most precious moment of my life. I dip down and kiss the baby lightly on the head and she starts to shift again, rubbing her tiny fist against her chubby cheeks and I let out a small giggle and smile. She yawns and in that second she slowly opens her eyes and my heart stops. She has my eyes. Then that means...she IS mine. She's my child too. I'm really her mom. I...I don't know what to say. I'm overwhelmed. I just start to cry, but they're tears of joy. I've never been so happy in my life. I look back at Risa, still unable to speak. I go over and kiss her, passionately.
“I love you.” I stutter, through my tears.
“I want her to have your last name. Takahashi Minto.” She replies.
I grin from ear to ear. I couldn't think of a better name myself.
A friend had to help me with the name. Minto is something they came up with which means wise door in kanji to match both the last names of Ai and Risa.
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Aww~
The first part --the whole scene with Ai-chan ambushing Risa at her apartment-- was really cool. I like how you described her feelings. It really gets the reader into the atmosphere of the story, the setting. I was really nervous along with her. Brought me back to the time when I was in a similar situation :cry:
By the way, you really have weird timing. I just finished learning about the birthing process and practicing how to deliver a baby. [bgcolor=#1d1d1d][bgcolor=#ffffff][bgcolor=#090909]Man, it's really nasty business.[/bgcolor][/bgcolor][/bgcolor] :k-crazy: And I was just thinking how I'd never want to get pregnant... then you bring down this atomic-warhead-of-a-fluff on me!! Damn you! XD XD
Anyways, I was all smiles reading through this. I now officially feel warm and fuzzy all over :heart: :heart: Nice work yet again! :thumbsup
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OHHHHHH..
pregnant Risa!!!
ohno..some old man drugged Ai! XD
im curious..haha.
LOL, Ai-chan was so cute hyperventelating. hahaha.
EPIC!!!
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Ok, considering they're both girls it would have been a miracle for them to have gotten pregnant this way.
That being said, after the bar scene I was totally expecting you to have them name the kid "Koharu".
:wahaha:
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OMG that was so cute!! :imdead: :imdead:
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@rindmnwierd- lol thanks, I'm happy that you like my latest one-shot.
@JFC- yes it can't happen but shhh it can happen here cuz stories make the impossible. Plus, TakaGaki having a child is so cute. ^_^ You can not deny that. lmao name their kid Koharu? Or maybe Miracle. lol
@ringo-hime- lol whatever the man did to the drink I'll leave it up to the readers' wild imagination. lol
@candy_boy- Oh...sorry didn't mean to remind you of all the nasty stuff that comes with giving birth and delivering a child. lol I can only imagine how that must look like. *cringes* Well at least I didn't have to go into detail about the baby being delivered! I saved you from that. lol I covered up that horrible imagery with fluff at the end so it's all good. =)
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OMG BABY~~~~ :w00t: TakaGaki baby!!!!! :wub: So cute!! As much as I enjoyed all the angstiness and confusion, the baby is the best part~~ :heart:
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That was so strangely cute. :heart:
I was actually expecting a boy!Aichan since, y'know, what are the chances of a woman impregnating another woman? But you totally surprised me by letting Aichan stay as a female throughout the whole story, despite the unusual circumstances between her and Risa. I know I'd freak just like her if I found out that I impregnated someone of the same sex. But I bet their kid is blindingly beautiful. I mean, the parents are Aichan and Risa after all. =D
So, um, what kind of stuff did the sneaky old man put in Aichan's drink? Is she kind of like a... "guy" now? ._. If so, then she better not get friendly with the other girls, or she'll end up in huge heaps of diapers trouble.
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I gave my 2-cents view on H!O but considering how beautiful this story is, I just have to put in another cents worth here also.
It's beautiful how you describe the story. I can't help but smile with Ai as she hold the baby (the lady who sat next to me thought I was crazy :lol:). Oh did I tell you that it's beautiful?
Btw, I totally seconded what Fizzle say here XD
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Strange, but it can only happen in the Land of H!P fics. :lol: Very sweet story, it's been a long time since I've read a story that had someone pregnant in it.
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She looks up at me from the ground, brokenhearted.
My heart did twinge
“When you're ready to tell me the truth you know where I'll be.” I growl. “Until then...don't even THINK about trying to speak to me. As far as I'm concerned...we're over Risa.”
Damn
“Oh silly girl
When I read this, I thought it was a typo but then when I read on... damn she really is a girl, no wonder Ai could not believe it
She's quite determined and I'm very stubborn.
A very good combination for a non ending battle XD
Woman+woman=baby’s strangeness didn’t leave a big question mark, at least for me, because it’s being overshadowed by the way you’ve awesomely written the story. Very impressive.
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Title: Eri's Christmas Adventure
“Mush! Mush! Mush! STOP! Hey, slow down! AH!”
The rider standing inside the red sled flipped over from the abrupt stop from her group of 'reindeer' who were having a hard time pulling the heavy wooden sled along the snow covered streets. It was much too late and too cold to be out pulling something this heavy. The ground was too slippery. In this type of blistering cold weather and at this late hour no one wanted to be out here fooling around or romping in thick white snow, but the commander of the sled who was still on the floor saw this as the perfect time to be out and do kind acts of generosity to others who were tucked comfortably into bed. The group working the sled envied the people who were into bed warm and shielded from the cold. The commander's partner peeked over the sled to inspect the damage to the sudden stop.
“Eririn, are you OK?!” Sayumi asked.
From the ground, a black glove covered thumb peeked out over the rim of the sled as a reply, quashing Sayumi's worries. She sighed and sat back into the cushioned sled seat. Her eyes turned to the 'reindeer' that caused her best friend to fall.
“Be careful you three.” Sayumi warned, to their 'reindeer'.
A sneeze erupted from one of the three 'reindeer', the other two were too cold to processes what was being said from the dark haired bunny decorated in red and white Christmas clothing. Visibly, the three 'reindeer' shook to fight against the strong brisk air. While Santa Kamei slowly climbed her way back to her feet and into the large red sled.
“I think I'm getting a cold!” Chisato complained, and sniffled.
“I can't feel my toes!” Miyabi cried. “Kamei-san, couldn't you have gotten REAL reindeer?”
Eri entered the sled once again and sat back down comfortably. She fixed the red and white Santa hat on her head before grabbing the ropes to her 'reindeer' again.
“Ah, but real reindeer don't fly!” Eri replied, with a goofy grin in place.
“Neither do we!” Chisato shot back.
Eri's grin grew which made her three juniors fear what else she had in mind. It was bad enough that she had gotten the three out of bed and nearly forced them all to come and aid the airhead turtle for her plan to spread Christmas cheer. If it weren't for Sayumi's help Eri would be here reindeerless.
“Well, yeah, you three can't fly, but you can climb.” Eri smirked.
Miyabi squinted at her senpai, trying to get the meaning behind her words. “What's that supposed to mean?”
Eri's goofy grinned remained and a giggle came out from hearing her junior's questions.
“Hey, wait a minute!” Chisato interrupted. “You can't afford real reindeer, but you can afford moose costumes?! You could have at least gotten the right costumes.”
“Yeah, why does Kusumi-san get the only reindeer costume?” Miyabi complained.
“I told you guys we're on a tight budget.” Eri replied, silencing the complaining of her two juniors. “Now, where are my two elves?!”
Eri and Sayumi looked around for their little helpers through the strong blowing winter air. The two rokkies noticed a pair of angry eyes during their search and knew it was one of their elves. The short elf folded her arms over her chest and sulked. She didn't want to be a part of this, but she had no choice and Eri and Sayumi weren't going to let her go now that they were at the first house. In defeat, the small elf stomped over to the sled in rage at the two girls that had forced her also to dress up in a ridiculous elf outfit. Right behind the unhappy elf followed another girl much more shorter than the angry elf up front.
“Why am I the elf?!” The taller elf snapped. “I wanted to be Mrs. Claus.”
“Because Reina, I make a cuter Mrs. Claus.” Sayumi replied, performing a cute pose to prove her statement.
She ignored the glare Reina was giving her and smiled at Reina's misfortune of being stuck to be an elf. The fact that Reina's glare was being ignored and had no effect on Sayumi it left Reina even angrier with her assigned duty in this stupid late night attempt of spreading Christmas spirit.
“Besides, who else is short enough to fit into those costumes?” Eri added. “Santa has to have his elves!”
“Hey!” Momoko shouted, offended to Eri's explanation.
Reina grumbled a few times and scowled. “I was better off being a reindeer.” She mumbled.
“But I like being Rudolf!” Koharu shouted.
“Enough!” Eri demanded, before any other statements were made. “Now just get us up that roof my Christmas helpers!” Eri pointed to the chosen house with a whip in hand.
The three 'reindeer' and two elves looked at the young turtle in silence. Neither girl could believe what she ordered for them to do. The group of girls looked at each other then back to Eri, who was still pointing to the roof with her whip. The five girls settled on to the thick whip in Eri's hand just realizing she had pulled that thick whip from nowhere.
“Where did she get that whip?!” Reina yelled in fear.
“You aren't serious, right?” Miyabi whispered.
“Very serious.” Sayumi replied. “Momo, Reina, you better help Koha, Chisato, and Miyabi get up that roof.”
***After Climbing The Roof***
“Why did you make us climb that roof?!” Momoko squeaked.
The group of girls were now inside the chosen house out of breath and red in the face from the strain of getting the heavy sled up the roof while Eri and Sayumi sat inside. The five girls who worked on getting the sled inside were all just glad it was over, which meant that they didn't have to worry about nearly falling off the roof again or breaking something. It also was nice to be inside a warm and cozy living room for a change rather than the ice cold winter weather outside.
“Hush, Momoko! Your high pitched voice squeaky voice annoys me.” Eri replied.
“We chose right to make her an elf.” Sayumi added, observantly.
Momoko pouted and turned away from her two senpais upset. She grumbled as she walked away to try and contain herself from snapping at the older girls. Eri stood up to see who she could get to do the work of unloading the bag of gifts.
“Momoko, get your peachy butt over here to unload the presents.” Eri ordered.
“Hey!” Momoko shrieked, a hand going over her butt in embarrassment. “...you think my butt is peachy?”
“Be careful, she has a whip.” Sayumi reminded, ending any protest that might have came after her question from Momoko's mouth.
“Who gave that whip to her in the first place?!” Chisato questioned. “My back hurts because of it!”
“My butt hurts!” Miyabi cried.
“I don't wanna be a reindeer anymore!” Koharu whined.
“Quit your complaining! We have stuff to do.” Eri reminded curtly, silencing the group once again. “NOW! The list! Sayumi get the list!”
Eri opened her hand, waiting for her request. Sayumi's face scrunched up in confusion then stared at Eri's opened hand.
“We have a list?” Sayumi whispered covertly.
Eri put her hand down and scratched the back of her head to the question. “Well...we're supposed to.” She answered.
“No one made a list?!” Reina screamed, highly annoyed.
Eri gave out a bashfully giggle and looked around to her four juniors, who were also unhappy to Reina's announcement. Eri scratched the back of her head and smiled nervously.
“I kind of figured...Sayu would do it.” She admitted.
There was a long pause as the group of girls glared at the aho turtle in the sled. Not only was everyone dragged out of their bed and forced to do this stupid stunt at the dead of night and freezing cold, but it was also not organized and Eri clearly had no idea what she was doing. This night couldn't be any worse.
“Can I go home now?!” Momoko pleaded, desperately.
“No! These people need presents.” Eri responded.
“Why don't we give everyone coal and we have all the gifts?” Sayumi smiled, evilly.
“Sayu, it doesn't work that way!” Eri denied. “Hmm...I'll just have to remember who gets what.”
“There's no way you can do that!” Reina protested. “There are too many people to remember.”
Eri signaled for Reina to remain quiet as she tried her hardest to remember the people on her large list. She did not get a word Reina said.
“Quiet down shorty!” Eri bellowed.
Reina's face turned into a sneer, her teeth grinding together, finally fed up with the remarks she was receiving from both Sayumi and Eri. It was bad enough being stuck an elf and now Eri was making fun of her height, a very touchy subject for the yankii. Eri snapped out of her heavy thinking and noticed Reina's raging facial expression.
“Your a snippy elf aren't you?” Eri noticed. “Where's your Holiday cheer, Reina?”
“Shut it, idiot!” Reina replied.
“I told her we should have made her a reindeer.” Sayumi whispered, for Eri to hear.
“Hey,” Miyabi cut in. “Who's house is this anyway?”
Suddenly, the light to the living room flickered on and the group of girls turned to the direction of the switch. Their expressions changed from confused and curious to fearful and panicked.
“MIKI?!” The girls yelled.
“RUN FOR IT!” Eri screamed.
The girls screamed and yelled while they ran around causing massive panic.
***Many Hours Later***
“I've never felt so violated!” Miyabi cried, clinging on to Momoko's arm disturbed.
Momoko hugged on to Miyabi tightly, obviously startled as well from what happened inside Miki's house. Koharu and Chisato just held on to each other crying and shaking from the horror they've been through, trying to escape from Miki's clutches. Sayumi was helping Eri who was having a hard time walking and fell straight into the snow a few times while walking down the street. Out of everyone in the group, Eri's clothes were ripped the most and her hair was a mess. She lost her hat on the way trying to leave and didn't bother to get it back. It was better off there for obvious reasons.
“C-can I go home now?” Momoko begged.
“Who ever knew Fujimoto-san had...” Chisato left the rest untold, too traumatized to say anything else.
The seven girls just looked at each other horrified from tonight's events. All seven made a silent promise that didn't need to be spoken. This was clearly a story that shouldn't be spread around amongst the Hello! Project girls and neither of the young girls in this group wanted anyone else to know. It was just better off left ignored and later forgotten. With the silent promise out of the way, Eri finally was able to find her voice.
“I-I- I think we should...go home.” Eri agreed, stumbling as she walked.
Sayumi rushed over to help steady the small turtle again. Eri clung on to her best friend for much needed support. The other girls nodded in agreement to Eri's announcement. Together, the girls walked through the bright colored snow taking relief in the quietness around this sleeping town.
“Kamei-san, are you OK?” Koharu asked, noticing Eri walking crooked.
Before Eri could even mumble a word, she slipped from Sayumi's weak grasp and fell face first into a large pile of snow.
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LOL of course it had to be eri XDDDDD so unorganised XDDD lol and of all the houses in the town they had to land on miki's XDDD so hilarious! XD
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Poor ReindeerS XD
The two rokkies noticed a pair of angry eyes during their search and knew it was one of their elves. The short elf folded her arms over her chest and sulked.
:lol:
“Hey!” Momoko shouted, offended to Eri's explanation.
OMG :rofl:
The group of girls were now inside the chosen house out of breath and red in the face from the strain of getting the heavy sled up the roof while Eri and Sayumi sat inside. The five girls who worked on getting the sled inside were all just glad it was over, which meant that they didn't have to worry about nearly falling off the roof again or breaking something. It also was nice to be inside a warm and cozy living room for a change rather than the ice cold winter weather outside.
How'd they do that, but very funny to imagine XD
“We chose right to make her an elf.” Sayumi added, observantly.
Damn :lol:
“Hey!” Momoko shrieked, a hand going over her butt in embarrassment. “...you think my butt is peachy?”
:rofl:
“Quiet down shorty!” Eri bellowed.
:lol:
Suddenly, the light to the living room flickered on and the group of girls turned to the direction of the switch. Their expressions changed from confused and curious to fearful and panicked.
“MIKI?!” The girls yelled.
“RUN FOR IT!” Eri screamed.
The girls screamed and yelled while they ran around causing massive panic.
:mon lmao: :mon lmao: :mon lmao:
That was so crack :twothumbs
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Chisato questioned. “My back hurts because of it!”
“My butt hurts!” Miyabi cried.
“I don't wanna be a reindeer anymore!” Koharu whined.
:lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:
OMG, this is awesome!
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Title: A Runner's Prize
'There are so many people here. I didn't expect the stadium to be this crowded. I better hurry inside if I want to get a seat.'
The creamy skinned girl weaved her way through the flock of young teenagers and walked toward her high school stadium, squeezing her way through the group as quickly as possible to the entrance. Her only objective was to reach her desired row before it was full. She wanted to get the best view for today's competition.
'I hope the front rows aren't taken when I get there.'
Fearing it will be too late to get her desired seat before she reached up the ramp of steps, the black haired teenager expedited her pace. The large amount of people, however, made it harder for her to get to her wanted seat on time. The constant shoving slowed her down, steering her away from her track. All the young students were eager to see their school's competition just as much as she was.
“Sayu!”
Sayumi almost didn't hear the call because of the bickering, laughing, and yelling for her high school's team to win around her. She paused at the bottom of the metallic steps, leading to the stands. Sayumi turned around and saw a familiar face between the crowd. She hurried over to greet her friend the second she spot her.
“Ai-chan, hi!” Sayumi greeted, instantly linking her arms to Ai's once she was in close distance with Ai. “I didn't think you would come.”
“Of course, I would be here! Risa and I were only begged to show up until the day of Eri's race. It was kind of hard to ignore.” Ai chuckled. “I see you've decided to show too. I think Eri will be happier that you're here. She misses you a lot you know?”
Sayumi felt her face turn hot at the mention of Eri. It had been a whole week since they were apart. It felt a lot more painful and torturous than Sayumi had thought. She was amazed at how long she could stay away from Eri since she was busy preparing for this race. It was the first time Eri had been chosen to represent her team and she wanted to do all she could to be ready for today's race.
That meant intense training and all her focus had to be dedicated to practice. Sayumi was lonely at first and acted a bit like a spoiled brat in the beginning, but she later knew how important the race and training was to Eri and Sayumi became less angry. When the strict practice was over Sayumi was invited, or more accurately begged to attend Eri's race and Sayumi couldn't deny her beloved girlfriend when she had asked Sayumi in such the cutest way with the most adorable pout on her lips. The pale girl's mind was set on seeing Eri's race as she had promised. She wanted to show her support for Eri.
“I...miss her too.” Sayumi bashfully admitted.
Ai smiled at Sayumi's bashful behavior. “Come on let's get on the stands.” Ai reminded.
Sayumi agreed and together the two teenagers made their way to find empty seats. Sayumi scanned the area for free a free bench that was close to the bottom of the stands. She pouted, seeing that there was barely room to sit and just might have to stand during the entire race.
'So much for the front seats!'
“Sayumi! Ai-chan! Over here!”
The pallid younger girl spun around, trying to spot the person who announced her name. In her search, she saw a single girl, waving her arms to catch her attention then motioned for her to come over. Ai led Sayumi to the bench, while Sayumi realized two empty seats were saved for them.
“Gaki-san!” Sayumi greeted, then did a double take back to Risa. “EHHH?! Gaki-san, you cut your hair?!”
Ai let out a small chuckle to Sayumi's shocked expression. Risa, on the other hand, glared at her with puffed out cheeks. Subconsciously, Risa's hands went to the top of her head, patting down her hair for any misplaced strands.
“What's wrong with my new hair cut?!” Risa questioned, slightly offended to Sayumi's outburst.
Sayumi smiled and let out a small giggle. “No, no, it's just...I didn't expect you to cut all your hair off. It's cute Gaki-san!”
Satisfied with her kouhai's response, Risa smiled once again, no longer bothered from Sayumi's response.
“We better take a seat. It looks like the race is going to start.” Ai announced, her eyes fixed to the track.
'I can't wait to see Eri race!!'
The two girls nodded silently to Ai's statement then took their seats, eagerly waiting for the selected girls to step to the track for the race to begin. The distance to the other end of the track was still far, giving Sayu a challenge to see the girls in red and white track outfits. She leaned forward as if it would give her a clearer view.
The screaming and laughing died down when the selected girls for the opening race positioned themselves to the starting line. Sayumi's hand clamped around the edge of the cold stainless steel bench in anticipation.
“I can't see anything!” Ai cried. “Gaki-san, who's lined up? Is Eri there?”
Risa cupped a hand over her eyes to block the sun and squinted. “Eri isn't up yet. She must be sitting on the bench.”
Sayumi sunk forward in her seat.
'I thought she was going to be in the race not watch from the sides. All her practice was for nothing?'
Sayumi felt a hand on her shoulder and turned to her right.
“Don't worry Sayu. Eri will have her turn soon.” Ai promised.
Sayumi nodded then went back to watching the first race. The crowd around her started to cheer and horns went off. Sayumi sat back, more relaxed, and enjoyed the lively-ness of the group of fans screaming shouts of support for their team.
***
“Don't be so upset Sayu.” Risa advised.
“Yeah, maybe Eri's coach wanted Eri to know how it feels to be in a competition and observe the other racers first.” Ai explained.
“I'm not mad.” Sayumi lied, crossing her arms over her chest.
'Of course I'll be mad! Eri hasn't done one race! The whole competition is almost over! I don't get why her coach would make Eri sit on the side the whole time. Eri is a great runner!'
“I wanted to see Eri race that's why I'm here!” Sayumi grumbled.
“Well...at least this is the last race so we can leave.” Ai remembered. “That way you can see Eri, Sayu.”
“Hey...is that Kame?!” Risa shouted.
'She's finally playing?!“Huh?!” Sayumi yelled, leaping nearly out of her seat.'
She could barely make out faces or forms from the large distance between the stadium and starting point of the race. Sayumi frowned and cursed Risa for having such great eyesight Sayumi wish she had at this moment.
“That is! That's Eri! She's going to run the finishing race!” Risa confirmed, in shock.
“Eh?! This is also the race that could make her team win!” Ai bellowed.
Sayumi leaned forward in her seat, about to burst with excitement. Her small hands wrapped around the edges of the bench seat and began to turn paler than usual from the lack of blood circulation. Sayumi was finding it hard to control her urge to stand out of her seat and yell in joy. She was going to finally see her girlfriend be apart of the race and possibly be the one to lead her team to victory. Sayumi followed the small dots of people intently. Her heart began to race and her body felt oddly hot from anticipation.
No one was more than happy to see Eri on the track other than Sayumi. The group of chosen girls to complete the final race lined up to the starting line like the others before them and got into their racing positions. The man at the side of the track lifted his arm and pointed the gun in his hand straight to the air.
“GO ERIRIN!” Sayumi shouted, just before the gun was fired.
Then the group of girls ran off with lightening speed. Sayumi never felt herself become so enthralled during a racing match as this one took place. Her heart pumped as if she were one of the runners out on the track and the blood rushed through to her face as she watched. Sayumi's stomach immediately became hot and she felt the urge to scream again as if it would help Eri pick up her pace to out run her opponents.
As Sayumi watched track memebers, she also felt a sense of beauty as the runners reached their full speed, reaching the end of the track. The finishing line was near. Sayumi can hear the students from her high school shout and blow horns, all egging on the runner representing their school to reach the thin white line for first place. Sayumi had never felt her heart beat this fast before just from watching something like a race before.
Then everything around her seemed to have slowed down and her main focus was on the proximity between Eri and the band of white tape at the end. Her chest felt as if it were about to burst and her whole body seethed with excitement.
“ERI!!!” Risa bellowed.
That seemed to be enough for the young turtle to move and she gave one last burst of energy to pick up her speed and crash right into the finish line with her hands held high in pride. Sayumi found herself springing out of her seat and yelled for joy just like everyone else in the crowd. She of course had a completely different reason to her celebration. Sayumi turned to her two friends and hugged them on impulse once they met eye contact with her.
The crowd eventually settled down, eager to see their school receive the first place championship trophy. While the small ceremony of her school's track coach received the trophy and gave a small speech of thanks still in a slight stage of shock to the team's win. Sayumi couldn't think about anything else other than getting down to the field to meet Eri again.
The large wooden and golden trophy was then accepted and another eruption of cheers followed after. Sayumi found this as her chance to leave and race down to meet her girlfriend yet again. She was the first to get to the stairs and hurry down.
'She won! I have to be the first to congratulate her!'
“Sayumi wait up!” Risa called, finding it hard to follow her. “I thought Sayu was bad at running?” Ai shrugged and continued to follow the quick bunny.
It wasn't long before Sayumi was on to the lush green grass and over to the other side of the field with the track team. Most of the girls had already long left and others were packing, getting ready to leave.
Sayumi paused, scanning through the group of girls for the one she had in mind to see, then spotted a slightly tanned teenager, standing in front of a much taller and lean girl. Sayumi figured it was her coach, since she did have the trophy in her hand. Sayumi walked over, interrupting the two girls from their serious conversation.
“Sayu?! You came!”
“Eririn~!!!” Sayumi called back, pulling her lover into a tight hug.
Eri chuckled and leaned into Sayumi's warm embrace. They held hands when the hug was over and couldn't stop smiling at one another.
“I missed you, Eri.” Sayumi pouts. “A week has been such a long time!”
Eri let out a small laugh and smiled. “Ah, Sayu, I wasn't gone that long! I'm glad to see you here. Did Gaki-san and Ai-chan come too?”
“They should be here soon.” Sayumi replies, leaning her head against Eri's shoulder affectionately. “Eri you were amazing! I had no idea you could run that fast. Was that race why you were training so hard last week?”
'She's so committed to her team.'
“Yeah, Iida-san wanted me to finish the last race. We wanted to win this year.” Eri explained.
“I always knew you were one of our top runners Eri. I had confidence in you.” Kaori interjects. She looked back to Sayumi who clung on to Eri as if she could disappear any moment. “You must be Sayu?”
Sayumi looked up from Eri's shoulder to Eri's track coach. She stood up straight and bowed to give a proper introduction.
“Yes, I'm Michishige Sayumi.” she confirmed.
“Eri kept mentioning you during training. She really did miss you.” Kaori states. “You two must be deeply in love.”
The two girls glanced at each other and blushed, Sayumi's face was a lot more visible due to her light skin. Kaori laughed and put a hand on her kouhai's arms in a assuring touch.
“Don't worry. I won't say anything. I think it's cute.” she promised. “You chose the right person Sayu.”
“Thank you.” Sayumi meekly replied, her face still burning hot from her flushed face.
“Well, I better get going. Eri you should go home too and get some rest. You've been working too hard lately.” Kaori advised, before walking off with her team's trophy.
'That...was a little embarrassing.'
“Sayu, there you are!” Ai yelled, joining her friends, with Risa behind her. “You just suddenly went off. Were you that eager to see Eri again?”
Sayumi felt her face turn hot with embarrassment again. Ai finished complaining to Sayumi and gave her full attention to the player who gave their high school the championship trophy. Eri gave Ai a small wave in return.
“Eri that was amazing! I didn't know you can run that fast.” Ai complimented. “You must be so happy that you've won.”
“I'm just relieved it's over. I was so nervous when I lined up!” Eri admitted. “I've never felt my heart beat that face before!”
Sayumi looked at Eri as she spoke with a love struck smile in place then giggled. “Eririn you're so cute~!” she commented, making Eri blush this time.
Sayumi clung on to Eri's arm and smiled. Eri was surprised that Sayumi had shown any affection towards her in public. She was used to it in front of her friends, but outside where plenty of other people can see made Eri a little embarrassed. Seeing that Eri was a little uncomfortable with the public affection, decided to interrupt and help Eri from feeling bashful.
“For someone who's 'my pace' you sure run fast.” Risa joked.
“Eri, would you like me to drive you home?” Ai asked.
“Yes please. I'm way too tired to walk home.” Eri replied.
“Eri are you okay? Maybe you should drink water! Did you bring your water bottle with you?” Sayumi questioned, grabbing Eri's gym bag for the water.
“Sayu! I'm fine. You don't have to worry so much. I just want to go home and take a bath. My legs ache.” Eri assured.
Ai and Risa laughed at Sayumi overreaction to Eri's weariness. Eri smiled at her girlfriend as a way of thank Sayumi for being so thoughtful then tied their hands together in a firm lock. Sayumi felt her heart swell with joy at the small action. Eri was becoming more comfortable with their relationship and with affection.
It made Sayumi beyond happy to see Eri breaking through her shell even if it were a little. Sayumi glanced at Eri with a loving smile in place then look back to her friends. Risa motioned for the couple to follow her and Ai to the parking lot, noticing that they probably wanted some alone time now that they're finally together.
“Oh, Sayu would you like me to drive you home also?” Ai asked.
“No, I'll come with Eri. It's fine Ai-chan.” Sayumi hastily replied.
Ai opened the back seat door and walked her way to the driver seat. Risa settled in the passenger seat in the front, while Eri and Sayumi took the back. When Eri was inside the car, Sayumi scooted over to Eri to lean against her girlfriend. Sayumi rested her head on Eri's shoulder.
Eri smiled, enjoying Sayumi's warmth. Eri looked down at Sayumi and her smile grew. Even if Sayumi would probably agree with Eri instead of thanking her for the compliment, Eri admitted Sayumi was cuter when she laid against the shy turtle like this. Eri squeezed Sayumi's hand that was still tangled around the track runner's hand and looked out the open window.
***
“Thank you for driving us home Ai-chan and thank you again for attending my game.” Eri smiled, waving goodbye to her two friends.
“It's the least I can do since you've done one long run today.” Ai replied.
Risa leaned over Ai to get a better view of Eri from the driver window. “Please take a warm bath to rest your sore muscles Eri.” The motherly bean asked.
Sayumi wrapped her arms around Eri's bicep and laughed. “She'll be fine Gaki-san! I'll take good care of her.” she promised.
The two older girls looked at each other with small smirks in place then chuckled. “I'm sure you will Sayu.” Ai laughed, before starting the car again. “I'll see you both on Monday, bye!”
'Can Ai-chan makes it anymore obvious?!'
The car in front of the two younger girls drove off, leaving them alone in front of Eri's large three floor house. Sayumi leaned her head against Eri while the little turtle on the other hand was staring into space, blinking subconsciously, trying to figure out what her two senpais meant before driving off in a fit of laughter.
“Sayumi...” Eri mumbled, slowly coming back to earth.
“Yeah?” Sayumi questioned.
Eri turned to her girlfriend with a confused expression in place. “What did they mean?”
Sayumi felt her face turn hot to Eri's innocent question. “It's nothing Eririn let's just get inside so you can relax.” she suggested.
Eri nodded, not really that curious to the answer of her question. The need to sleep and sooth the aching in her body was much stronger than needing to find the hint behind Ai's words. Sayumi lead her tired girlfriend through the front gates of Eri's house and quickly made it to the front door. She spun around to retrieve the key to open the top lock of the entrance door.
“Eri, don't you have a key?” Sayumi reminded, seeing Eri staring into space again. “Eri?”
Eri let out a heavy sigh and blinked. She rubbed her droopy eyes and smile, bashfully. Eri put on a goofy smile, feeling embarrassed to be caught 'communicating'.
“I'm sorry Sayu. I'm really tired.” Eri apologized, digging into her pockets to pull out the house key. She didn't notice Sayumi frown to her exclamation. “Here it is!” The tired track member held out the key in front of Sayumi's face proud that she didn't lose something this important for once.
Sayumi took the copper item and wasted no time to unlock the door and walk inside. The two high school students stood in the foyer, scanning for anyone else in the house.
“Mom! Dad! I'm home.” Eri announced, hearing her voice echo in her huge spacious house.
A loud bark ripped through the echo, followed by the sound of scratching against the floor and a sharp bark. Sayumi jumped and let out a loud scream when Eri's dog, Aru came racing towards his owner and visitor.
“Aru stop!!” Eri shouted, glaring at her on coming dog. “Rina!!”
Eri put her hands up to protect herself from the oversized dog that is about to jump up and tackle his small owner. There isn't anything else Eri can do. She let out a high pitched yell with Sayumi, bracing herself to be knocked down.
“Eri?” Another girl called. There was footsteps from the stairs in the foyer. “Eri, you're home. Aru stop it!”
Aru was pulled away from his collar and a loud sigh was let out from both frightened girls. The girl that had pulled Aru into the living room and came back to properly greet her sister.
“Welcome home Eri.” she greeted, giving Sayumi a warm smile as well. “Hello Michishige-san. Are you going to spend the night again?”
“She's just staying here for a few hours, Rina.” Eri informed. “Is mom home?”
“She'll be back soon. Mom went out to buy some ingredients for tonight's dinner. Dad is still at work.” Rina replied. “How did the race go?”
“My team won.” Eri smiled, still filled with pride to her victory.
“Congratulations! I knew you were a good runner.” Rina congratulated. “Oh, do you want anything to eat or drink? You must be thirsty after your run.”
“I'm fine. I'm just going to take a bath and probably rest before dinner.” Eri declined.
“Okay, I'll tell you when dinner is ready.” Rina said, walking towards the living room to flick on the TV.
“You're sister is very nice.” Sayumi complimented. “Why is that she never calls you Onee-chan?”
Eri lead the bunny up the stairs quietly, eager to get to her room to get ready for her bath.
“I don't like when she calls me that. I just told her to call me Eri instead.” Eri replied, pushing open her room door and switched on the lights. “I shouldn't take long bathing, but if you get hungry or thirsty you can go downstairs and help yourself.”
Sayumi took a seat to Eri's bed, nervously placing her hands to her thighs.
“I'll be fine.” Sayumi assured.
Eri excused herself out of her room to take her much needed bath and Sayumi was left alone in Eri's room in silence. Sayumi took this moment to scan Eri's room out of curiosity to see if anything had changed. She concluded that it was the same extremely messy room with a couple of incompletely collections that Eri had grew out of and a desk that is covered with mountains of paper that Sayumi couldn't tell it wasn't a desk if it weren't for the small lamp that peeked out behind the stacked sheets and a computer chair next to the white sheets.
'Some things still haven't changed, huh, Eririn?'
Sayumi smiled to herself, seeing that Eri's disorganized behavior had not changed along with some of her weird tendencies such has standing in corners when nervous. It was something that Sayumi in some sort of odd way, enjoyed, it made Sayumi only love her shy turtle even more. Sayumi sighed and stood up from her spot, having enough sight seeing of Eri's mess.
'I might as well make myself useful. Her room could use some tidying.'
With her mind set on her chosen task, Sayumi began to pick up heaps of wrinkled clothing and sorted them into neat piles by article of clothing. Shirts were in one pile to her right, shorts were to her left, and small clothing such as socks and underwear in the middle. The black haired teenager made sure to fold every piece of clothing neatly and set them to Eri's bed when completed.
Normally, a mess this huge would upset any parent, but picking up after Eri didn't bother the quiet working bunny at all. Silently, Sayumi continued to sort out crumbled clothes and put them into well-kept hoards of clothing. She kept this steady pace, losing track of how long she's been preoccupied with cleaning, forgetting that Eri hadn't returned yet. There was then a knock to her door and carefully the door began to open.
“Eri, can I borrow...oh...Michishige-san. I didn't know you were here, sorry.” Rina mumbled, looking at the underwear that was still in Sayumi's hands. “W-what are you doing?”
Sayumi noticed Rina's gaze and quickly dropped the underwear on to the floor. She felt her whole face turn hot, realizing how odd it must have seen from Rina's point of view. The flustered rabbit let out a timid laugh.
'This is awkward!!!'
“I was cleaning Eri's mess!” Sayumi bellowed, pointing to the group of clothes next to her.
Rina looked over the pile then faced Sayumi not wanting to search deeper into Sayumi's claim. She had something more important to do, like finish her math homework. Sayumi put on a small smile.
“If you're here then where is Eri?” Rina asked.
“She's taking a bath.” Sayumi retorted.
“I better go check on her to see if she hasn't fallen asleep in the tub again. The last time she almost drowned.” Rina announced, facing back to the door. “I don't get how she can sleep anywhere.”
Rina left the door, allowing Sayumi to let out a much needed sigh. Rina chose one of the worse times to come in. Sayumi sat down to take a break from cleaning.
'Rina-chan probably thinks I'm a pervert now!'
The door to Eri's room opened again, but this time instead of Rina entering it was Eri, tiredly rubbing her eyes with a towel clutched in the other. Eri groggily went scurrying through her cluttered room, for needed clothes to slip into a more comfortable outfit.
'She did fall asleep in the tub.'
Sayumi laughed silently to herself from her observation. She heard Eri give out a loud yawn and gather pieces to complete her outfit. Sayumi watched her quietly, realizing that Eri is still dripping wet and spotted a drop of water at the back of Eri's neck. The middle-aged teenager inventively watched the drop slide down Eri's neck to the small section of her bare back then disappear behind Eri's fluffy white towel.
Sayumi felt her face run warm then rapidly turn hot as if she were running a fever. Her heart started to pump uncontrollably, fueled by her deepest desire, Eri. The younger girl wanted more than anything to race up to Eri and remove the teasing towel to have her way with the older girl, but Sayumi used every fiber in her body to subside her needs. Deciding that watching was a much better option, Sayumi looked on, while Eri was unaware of her girlfriend's lust filled eyes. She probably had forgotten Sayumi was here.
'Does she have any idea what she's doing to me?!'
Sayumi gulped, placing a hand to her beating chest. Her heart was so loud she wondered why Eri didn't hear it either. The sound was similar to a constant bongo drum. Worried that her face could be as red as a strawberry, Sayumi put both her hands to her cheeks and felt how hot her skin had turned just from her thoughts alone.
'I've never felt my heart beat this fast before. There's something that makes me more attracted to her.'
“Sayu. Sayu!” Eri yelled, ripping Sayumi of her thoughts.
“Huh?!” Sayumi chirped, clearing her throat once hearing how scratchy it became. “Yes?”
Eri raised her brow to Sayumi's odd voice. “I was saying that is it okay I change here?”
Sayumi felt her stomach swirl at the question. Now was not the best of time to ask, but she couldn't say no. A part of her even wondered why Eri even asked since this is her room. Pushing her thoughts aside, Sayumi spoke again.
“It's fine! I'll just close the curtains and turn around.” Sayumi agreed, dashing to the window and pulling the curtains together.
Sayumi stood at the window, studying the curtains intensely, while trying to keep her mind off the fact that Eri was a few steps away from her, getting dressed. Knowing that Eri is naked, Sayumi stared even harder at the curtain and gripped on to the soft material.
'I never noticed that they have a turtle pattern on them. Eri is so cute.'
Feeling that her desire had lowered slightly, Sayumi felt more comfortable staying in the same room as her girlfriend and focused on the things that Sayumi found so cute about Eri. This made her lustful urges eventually shrink down to nothing. The paled-skinned teenager's body became less tense.
“I'm done!” Eri announced, allowing Sayumi to turn around again. “Sayu, are you hungry? Rina told me dinner is done.”
“Yeah I'm starving!” Sayumi quickly answered.
“Come on, let's eat!” Eri enthusiastically agreed, grabbing on to Sayumi's hand to direct her out of her room and to the kitchen.
'She's so cute when she's eager for food too. Everything Eri does is so cute!'
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“Ah I'm so full~!” Sayumi cried, plopping herself on Eri's bed, staring blankly at the ceiling.
A small hand placed on to the bunny's soft stomach, rubbing lazily in a circular motion. Sayumi held a content smile to her full belly.
“Your mom's cooking is so good.”
From the corner of her eye, Sayumi watched Eri walk around the room, gathering what she needed to get ready for Sayumi's stay, alarmed to Sayumi's actions. As the Eri steadily went around her room she paused at her dressers and looked around her with a puzzled expression.
“Sayumi, did you clean up in here?” Eri asked, casually, unfaltering to the fact that Sayumi had went through her personal belongings to try and tidy up the turtle's messy room. The drowsy rabbit nodded. Eri let out a small sigh of frustration and went back to zipping back and forth through the room. Sayumi sat up on the bed.
“What's wrong?” Sayumi asked.
“I can't find anything now!” Eri complained.
Sayumi gave her girlfriend the strangest look. Sometimes even after knowing Eri for a good amount of years, Sayumi still couldn't understand the strange turtle. The taller girl was sure that Eri's unpredictable behavior was what she liked about the older girl.
'How can she have an easier time finding something in huge piles of dirty clothes?!'
“Okay, I found it!” Eri declared, holding out a cluster of clothes in her closed fist into the air. She looked back at Sayumi and held out the bundle of crumpled clothes to her. “I found your pajamas.”
Sayumi held out a hand hesitatingly. “Is it...even clean?” Sayumi questioned.
Eri pulled her hand back to her chest, unsure to Sayumi's faint question and scratched the back of her head while looking the articles of clothing over. Eri began to pout, stumped to her lack of information. Sayumi couldn't help, but smile. Eri always had the cutest pouts when she was either unsure of something or thinking too hard.
“I...I think so.” Eri muttered.
“Eri this is why you need to clean your room and have everything neat!” Sayumi protested.
Eri frowned. “Alright, don't worry Sayu! I'm sure my mom has a clean pile of my clothes in the dryer. I'll be right back.” Eri promised, then hurried out the room.
'Eri, you're always so unorganized. I don't know how you can live in a room like this!'
Rolling on to her side, Sayumi scooted closer to the head of the bed and placed her head onto a soft pillow. On instincts, Sayumi pressed her face into the gentle cushion and took in a deep breath to the sweet scent clinging to the fabric. She let out a deep sigh and smiled.
'Strawberries. I always liked that shampoo on her the most.'
Sayumi rubbed her cheek against the fluffy pillow, washed away from the soft fruity smell. That smell always relaxed her. She often told Eri to use that shampoo the most, but like always Eri forgot, but Sayumi never made a big deal about it.
The younger girl was happy enough to lay in Eri's arms when they came home from school to cuddle before doing homework. The warmth the aho gave off made Sayumi feel relaxed after a hard day of lecturing. Sayumi let out another sigh and felt herself start to slip into a peaceful sleep.
“You're such a pervert!!” Eri shouted, startling her girlfriend. “Geez, what if I was Rina?!”
Sayumi laid flat on her back again and blushed. “She...already might think I am a pervert.” Sayumi muttered. “While I was cleaning she...came in and I had one of your underwear in my hands at the time.”
Eri's eyes opened wide in surprise. “You had one of my underwear in your hand?! You're an even bigger pervert than I thought!” Eri complained.
“No! I-It isn't w-what you think!” Sayumi cried.
'Isn't that the oldest line in the book!?'
Eri's face slowly turned from angry to happy and she started to laugh. Sayumi sat still lost at her sudden eruption of laughter. Eri held on a goofy smile and took several deep breaths to calm herself.
“Sayumi you're too funny! I know you were cleaning my room.” Eri giggled. “I just wanted to see you blush.”
Sayumi frowned and turned away from Eri with her arms folded over her chest. “Hmm! That wasn't funny, Eri!” she scolded. “You idiot!”
Eri stopped laughing and crawled over to the furious bunny in the middle of her bed. Sayumi glared down at her feet, completely ignoring Eri's pout for forgiveness. She knew that if she did look, she would easily cave. Sayumi didn't want to lose that quickly.
'I'm not falling for the puppy eyes!'
“Aw...Sayumi~!!” Eri refuted, sitting in front of Sayumi. “I'm sorry! I didn't mean to upset you.” There was still silence. “Sayumin~!!”
'I'm not falling for the cutesy voice either!!'
Eri took a piece of black hair between her fingers and pushed it behind Sayumi's ear. The airhead sat there, looking over Sayumi's hunched over form, waiting for the pallid-skinned girl to respond. Seeing that Eri wasn't going to win, she only had one option left and if that didn't work then she had no idea what would. Eri leaned closer to Sayumi and ran her fingers through long jet-black locks. Eri saw Sayumi stiffen at the feeling of Eri's fingers through Sayumi's hair.
“You looked so cute when you blushed.” Eri whispered, nuzzling her nose to the tip of Sayumi's ear. She turned around, finally noticing how close their faces were. Eri put on another smile that she knew will claim Sayumi's heart all over again.
'Why does she always win?! It isn't fair that she's so cute!'
“Really?” Sayumi asked.
Eri nodded. “Sayumi is always cute! It's why I like you.” Eri confirmed.
Sayumi eyed her girlfriend wearily. “That's it?” she complained.
“Yeah. Why else?” Eri responded, as if such a question was stupid to ask.
'She only agreed to date me because of my looks?!'
Sayumi frowned again and flicked Eri's forehead before sitting on the edge. Eri yelped out in pain and put a hand to her forehead. Then once again began to laugh and sit behind her girlfriend. The athletic girl put her arms around Sayumi's small waist and rested her chin to Sayumi's shoulder.
“I'm just kidding~” Eri giggled. “Can't you just take a joke, Sayumi?”
Sayumi pouted, ignoring Eri. “I was serious when I asked that Eri!” Sayumi clarified.
Realizing the seriousness to the question, Eri became more stern. The last thing she wanted to do is upset her lover and possibly hurt her feelings, or worse, make Sayumi second guess their relationship. So to put the bunny back at ease, Eri decided to apologize.
“I'm sorry. I shouldn't have said that. I didn't mean to hurt your feelings Sayumi. Of course I like you for other reasons.” Eri answered, solemnly.
'How do I know she's not telling me that as a joke?'
Sayumi shifted between Eri's legs to get a better view of the track runner's face. She needed to make direct eye contact with Eri to see she meant these meaningful words. It was the only why Sayumi felt that she could know Eri's speaking the truth. The second Sayumi turned around the two teenagers locked eyes as if they were under a spell.
Sayumi put her hand over Eri's. The sudden contact made Eri smile remembering that they had been apart for an entire weak. The turtle felt her body awaken with desire, reminding her just how much she missed having Sayumi's presence near her.
“What other reasons?” Sayumi whispered, curiously.
“Well...I like that you're reliable, trustworthy,...and beautiful both inside and out.” Eri said, with a dreamy smile in place. “I love you, Sayumin.”
'She really loves me that much?'
Sayumi looked into the turtle's eyes, for any traces of lies, but there was nothing. Eri was being honest and meant all her words. Sayumi had on a huge smile then turned around and kissed Eri on the lips. The kiss was brief and completely unexpected. Sayumi smirked when Eri let out a groan of disappointment when it quickly ended.
However, the distance between both girls from kissing again wasn't far, but Sayumi didn't want to kiss the luscious lips before her just yet. To make sure Eri stood back, Sayumi put a hand to Eri's cheek and placed a finger to Eri's bottom lip. The contact of soft skin only excited Eri even more. Her blood began to rush through body, fueling Eri's fervor. Sayumi stared at the parted lips and ran a finger along Eri's mouth.
“Eririn...” Sayumi heaved, finding it harder to control herself anymore. Eri let out a small whimper, but remained seated, waiting for Sayumi to close the distance to kiss again. “I love you too. Eri...tell me you love me again.”
Sluggishly, Eri's tongue slipped out and licked her parched lips, accidentally brushing the tip against Sayumi's finger in the process. The flushed rabbit let out a small gasp and licked her own lips, hungrily.
“...I love you. Sayumi, I love you!” Eri breathlessly shouted.
Sayumi slipped further into Eri's lap and tied her arms around Eri's curvy body before diving in to kiss her again with a fiery passion. Eri's hands automatically linked around Sayumi's back and slipped under her shirt, for better contact to her skin. Wildly, their tongues met together, trying to over power the other into submission. Sayumi's hips began to grind against Eri's lap and received a sharp cry in return.
One of Eri's hand pulled out from Sayumi's shirt and curled around the taller teenager's slender neck, tangling with thick black hair again. Eri flinched when she felt small fingers slip into her pants and rub against her underwear undetected. The lovers' pent up needs of physical contact for one another finally reached its limit. Neither girl could contain it any longer especially now since they were alone.
Eri grabbed on to Sayumi's waist and lifted her so that she was now placed in the center of the bed. Eri positioned both her hands beside Sayumi's head and glanced down to her girlfriend with a lovestruck gaze. Sayumi closed her eyes and gulped to try and control her rush of emotions. She can barely breathe from the burst of excitement.
'Eri...I love you. I don't ever want to lose you! You're my world.'
Eri placed a kiss to Sayumi's forehead and moved her hands down to Sayumi's light pink skirt. She saw Sayumi jump when Eri's fingers touched the bunny's thighs and smirked. With her devilish smile still in place, Eri pushed the frilly thin skirt up to Sayumi's stomach and slipped her fingers into the inner side of Sayumi's thighs.
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Sayumi stared down adoringly to her girlfriend as she began to slowly recover. A light smile came to Sayumi's face as she watched Eri.
'She's beautiful. I can never love her enough.'
Gaining her strength again, Eri slowly opened her eyes and blushed when she saw Sayumi staring intensely down at her. A goof smile came across her face.
“Wha~t?” Eri bashfully asked.
Sayumi giggled and laid down against Eri. Comfortably, her head settled under Eri's chin. Eri slid a hand down Sayumi's arm to find her hand and closed their hands together. Eri's left arm was placed around Sayumi's slim waist.
“Eririn...I love you so much.” Sayumi mumbled, playing with Eri's fingers. “Sometimes...it scares me how much I do.”
“Scare you?” Eri repeated. “Why?”
“Because, what will happen if I can't stop?” Sayumi questioned. “What if you get taken away from me? It isn't long before we leave high school and go to different colleges.”
“Sayumi, you'll never stop loving me just how I'll never stop loving you. And even if we go to different colleges...I'll always be with you because it's where my heart says I belong, by your side.” Eri confirmed. “Besides, we're supposed to be celebrating. I won the race! We don't want to ruin the celebration do we?”
Sayumi lifted her head up from Eri's chest and shook her head. Eri smiled and ran a hand through thick messy tresses.
'She's always so good to me. I couldn't ask for a better girlfriend. Eri is meant for me.'
“Aren't you glad you won that race?” Sayumi grinned.
Eri held on a similar smile. “I should win more often.”
The two teenagers laughed shortly after before letting out big yawns as sleep finally came over them. Rubbing her eyes, Sayumi cuddled against Eri's chest again.
“Good night Eri.” Sayumi yawned.
A slow breath escaped from Eri's mouth. She too agreed sleep was something much needed. With a lazy hand, Eri pulled the sheets around the two of them and began to close her eyes. Peacefully, the two girls fell into a light slumber, linked together as one.
The full perv is in the perv section. I can also post a link for those who don't have access in the perv. http://pkkame.wordpress.com/2010/09/18/a-runners-prize-kameshige/ (http://pkkame.wordpress.com/2010/09/18/a-runners-prize-kameshige/)
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Kameshige! :w00t: It's really domestic in it's sweetness. Love it! :wub:
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*off to the perv* XD
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Oooh a long KameShige fic!! I missed these 2 featured in fics. And there's a little of AiGaki too :)
I love the "you are my world" line. I might melt if I heard it in real life ^^;
I really need to find time to read the "extra" part :P
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Hey it's been a while I don't have a new one-shot just yet, but I do have a comic. It's a comic version of my one-shot The Start of Love. I haven't gotten a cover for it yet since I already spent almost four days making the five paged comic. XD When I do finish the cover I'll post it. I'm sorry if the drawing isn't my best. It's very difficult to fit something into a small box oddly. o.O I draw better when I'm not limited to draw in a tiny space. I also did everything by hand, including the panels and the shading and inking.
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I'm sorry my writing is crappy! ^^; I wonder if it's even possible to read any of this comic. o.o I also need to improve, but this is my first comic and I hope as I continue to make them I improve.
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That was really cute to see
written drawn out. :wub:
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Nice idea to use the comic style for a one-shot, it was definatly a nice change from the norm!
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:oops: Thanks you two. I was really unsure about posting this. ^^; I'm glad some people like it. I'm going to hopefully make another one-shot in this form. I just need to rest my hand right now. Drawing for three days straight in a row made my hand hurt every time I held a pencil while drawing. I'll probably even draw this comic over.
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Title: My Everything
She laughs and nods. I can accept that. Forget about how it’s forbidden. I’ll have to take the risk of getting caught. I can deal with the consequences later, because she’s worth it. She’s worth everything.
eh..i cant comment much because i skip several dangerous part, sorry ^^;;
but, i think that line summarize everything ^^
yes, she is your best friend, leader-san, but, you know you love her ^_^
Title: My Goodbye Letter
eh? a goodbye letter? why? where?
Please don’t take too long. I’ll wait for you.
Gaki-san will wait for Ai untill Ai comeback to her, for some reason i get that sort of feeling ^^;
Title: On The Brink of Insanity
“We’ll meet again. I promise.”
yeah, they will meet again, sometime, when the time has come ^^
eh, but it is a sad story....>.<
I can see Risa and she’s calling me. She’s telling me to come with her. She wants me be with her. To finally meet her like I’ve promised. I hear her sometimes too you know. She tells me things. Yeah, you can look at me that way if you want. Maybe I am crazy after all.
a part of me want to say that Ai is crazy because Risa is already leaving this world so there's no way she could talk with her.
but, another part of me believe that she isnt crazy, how if Risa really called her? how if...?
Title: The Start of Love
Now it’s my turn to give her a bewildered look. She might just be strange like me after all. I’m going to like having her around. She smiles again and there’s something about her smile that makes my heart beat faster. It attracts me to her. I never noticed how pretty she is either. I’ve never had these feelings before. What is this? My stomach feels tight and queasy. My skin feels hot. Am I getting sick? No, that’s not it. Wait…I think I’m…in love?
yeah, Kamei-san, i could diagnose you that you have a love symptom :D
eh, this story is cute >_< much more cuter than the sad story before it.
ah, as i read it i could see heart are fluttering down as the story continue, just like in love manga :nya:
Title: The Most Precious Gift
eh? pregnant?
oh, so it is like that..now that i finished reading it, i felt relieved :yep
Risa shouldnt surprised us like that...
but, i am glad that the ending is happy ^^
Title: Eri's Christmas Adventure
:lol:
among all of the house there, they have to pick the wrong house
the reindeers are having so much pain that night :lol:
i want to quote but i may quote everything in this story..it is so funny :lol:
Title: A Runner's Prize
“I thought Sayu was bad at running?”
:lol: nothing cant stop the bunny from meeting her precious turtle :D
'I might as well make myself useful. Her room could use some tidying.'
that's a good meaning while this,
“Eri, can I borrow...oh...Michishige-san. I didn't know you were here, sorry.” Rina mumbled, looking at the underwear that was still in Sayumi's hands. “W-what are you doing?”
that's a suspicious meaning :lol:
what a good timing from Rina to enter the room :lol:
“Eririn...I love you so much.” Sayumi mumbled, playing with Eri's fingers. “Sometimes...it scares me how much I do.”
surprisin how you could feel scared because of love...but, it is kind of true...
Title: The Start of Love
comic ver.
whoa, that's cute >_< kameshige is cute...eh, they're always cute actually :D
you have been working hard to make it, that's for some reason is cool..
it isnt easy to make a comic, i know because one of my school project is making a short comic.
as i make it, i feel like i want to give up..because it is tiring and difficult >.<
eh, now you must be thinking that my comment are weird ^^;;
eh, i like reading your story ^_^
sankyuu for writing many enjoyable stories
as for now, i will patiently wait for another story ^_^
writerjunkie-san ganbare~ ^o^
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oh wow, fingers hurt? no kidding. this was fantastic- thanks for sharing your drawings with us. I love the opening panels- how you were able to create sounds and space.
sometimes, when i write, i wish i could draw the story because sometimes, words just won't do. You've really taken fic writing up another level.
there are loads of resources online about drawing sequential art- i can only see this getting better.
Great job!
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@ shiroihana- O.O Wow you read all my one-shots?! How long did that take you?! lol
I'm glad though you've enjoyed all of them. It makes me feel happy about posting them all. I worked hard on all of them, although I feel only really proud of a few of them. :nervous
I have some threads in here also that are one-shots if you're interested in reading them like Coming Back Home for example and Distraction. I hope I can post another one-shot though. I have about two in the making and they will be much longer than A Runner's Prize. lol That's also why it's taking so long. That mixed with laziness, lack of inspiration/motivation, me being a perfectionist, and the list goes on.
Until then, I will be making another one-shot into a comic I already know which one.
@ gracula- hello! ^_^
Yes, my fingers hurt and they are doing much better now. I guess I'm just not used to doing my drawing that intensely. lol I'll get used to it eventually.
I like the opening panel myself, but only the first one. It's probably because I felt I put more time and effort in that one panel.
wow, create sound and space in my comic, I never thought of that or intended it. I just copied what I remember from mangas and comics I read.
You know, I would offer to make a fic or whatever you write into a comic, the thing is I feel that my skills in a comic is just not ready yet. I'm using a lot of my fics as practice and an experiment with my comic drawing skills. What's really shameful too is that I've been drawing since I was a child and every panel in that comic looks like a little kid with a twitchy hand drew it. T____T That's also why I didn't want to post this comic when I wasn't even done with it. But...I have to start somewhere. At least my normal drawings are much better than that comic drawing.
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Aw, that comic was cuteeeeeeeeeee ~ :heart: Young KameShige love :wub:
And that's one of the one-shots I've read from you before (aah, lurker memories~), so it made it even more cute XD
Maybe you should try to do less panels in each sheet, so you don't have to force yourself to fit the drawing in such a small box? I got a little confused with the order at reading (sorry, I'm slow like that x_X), but I think it was because there were too many panels. I don't know a thing about drawing comics XD But I think is extremely difficult to know how to "properly" do it. Is always easier to do a simple drawing than to do a comic. So, doing this comic only from the knowledge you have from reading is awesome :panic:
Drawing is all about practice practice practice! Keep experimenting and you'll see your skills improving more and more ~
Like grac said, I can only see this getting better :cow: :cow:
And take care of your hand, is your most precious "tool" in this situation XD
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^ Thanks, when I first got the idea I thought it was so cute I immediately started writing and that's how that short one-shot was made.
Oh, another lurker? Or...used to be a lurker. There are a lot of those. lol
You know I never thought of less panels. ^^; I wanted to put as much as I can because the paper I use is really long and I don't want to leave huge gaps on the page, but I think I might have to put less panels. That and use a smaller paper. Thanks for the advise. ^_^ I'm sorry you got confused, I put some numbers on the panels, but I guess it didn't show up so well. I'll have to think about the order of panels more carefully next time.
Haha, drawing comics is difficult, but in manga it's a bit more difficult especially if a mangaka uses a dip pen, which I tried to use in the second panel of the first page and...failure! The ink bled. T_T It's odd because I've used it before on my normal drawings and that never happened, but it happens when I ink a comic wth?!
I'm glad you enjoyed the comic though even if I see some horrible mistakes in every panel and page. lol I'll have to draw it again to hopefully get better.
And, my hand is doing fine now. I just might make another comic now. lol That is if my video games I got for Christmas don't distract me!
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More like used to be a lurker, yeah XD
And what I meant was... less but bigger panels? If the paper is long then you have more space to draw bigger :heart: But in the end, the better is what you feel more comfy with while drawing, so ganbare ~
And now that you mention it... THERE ARE NUMBERS IN THE PANELS. Ok, my bad... I totally missed them :sweatdrop: Thanks for the tip XD
Haha, drawing comics is difficult, but in manga it's a bit more difficult especially if a mangaka uses a dip pen, which I tried to use in the second panel of the first page and...failure! The ink bled. T_T It's odd because I've used it before on my normal drawings and that never happened, but it happens when I ink a comic wth?!
:lol: :lol:
I can imagine. I had problems before with that, while trying to ink some random drawing. I sure would do a mess if I have something with so many lines and and such like a comic :lol:
Have you thought of doing the "inking" with photoshop or something like that? It's a little tiring I guess to do it with the pc, but at least you don't have to worry as much about mistakes.
Another comic coming up? :w00t: Sounds great :heart: Enjoy your videogames as well ~
And don't forget to write more too! :cow:
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Awww, so finally you made a comic!! ^_^
I was been at my hometown for awhile :cry: I missed you *hug*
Your comic is so kawaii! ^_^ so does the story. Just practice more! You'll improve! ^_^ Don't hesitate to post your comic here!
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AWESOME, junkie-chan! :wub:
I knew it, you're a great drawer. Far, far beyond anything I'm capable of XD
Sure, it's a little rough around then edges, but I think that works to your advantage rather than against. I'm going to have to read The Start of Love now. Was planning to catch up with all your one-shots during my 'boring' bus trips, but I always end up sleeping through those (late night outs playing all the time >.<).
KAMESHIGE! ohmygosh, my heart has been beating hard for these two even more so lately, with everything that's been going on :cry:
Such a cute little story... :k-inlove:
Thanks for putting this up... thanks for all the effort you've put into drawing it all out. That kind of thing would've taken me a year to draw. Fantastic stuff, and hope to see more from you soon. :heart:
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@ shiroihana- O.O Wow you read all my one-shots?! How long did that take you?! lol
I'm glad though you've enjoyed all of them. It makes me feel happy about posting them all. I worked hard on all of them, although I feel only really proud of a few of them. :nervous
I have some threads in here also that are one-shots if you're interested in reading them like Coming Back Home for example and Distraction. I hope I can post another one-shot though. I have about two in the making and they will be much longer than A Runner's Prize. lol That's also why it's taking so long. That mixed with laziness, lack of inspiration/motivation, me being a perfectionist, and the list goes on.
Until then, I will be making another one-shot into a comic I already know which one.
i spent several hours to read. ^^ but, it's okay actually because i'm having a good time reading it. sankyuu for your hardwork :)
oh...nah, i will read your others one-shots too. it seems interesting for me ^^~
eh...that mixed of long list of the reason why're you taking so long to make a fic, i think it'll make the fic become more delicious once it have been out from the oven, so i will eventually wait for your story patiently ^_^
and, oh...another comic to come, i cant wait to read it XD
until that time come, writerjunkie-san, ganbare~ ^^/
wait, now that i think about it, your name is quite long lol, could i just call you jun or junkie?
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>.>
Finally finished this!! I had this saved on my computer for about...two years at least. I'm still not happy with it, but at least it's a one-shot. I only hope to bring out a better one than this crap. I hope some readers though can enjoy it or like it in some way. I did work hard on it. And...I don't know if this is good news or not, but I started my comic. I have two pages done. I don't know how long this will take since the fic to the comic is kind of long. Until then, read this fic or try to. lol
@ shiroihana - you can call me Junkie like everyone does. ^_^ I'm glad you enjoyed all the fics by the way. I really hope you will like this one somehow.
@ Bee - Ah there you are! I miss talking to you! ^_^ So I'm even happier to get a comment by you. I miss them too. lol I'm not the best drawer. You should see my friends. O.O Amazing! But I do try to make my drawings good enough. I hope you're enjoying your trip.
@ Lilith - Yes, I finally made a comic, but I kind of regret it. There are many things I do not like about it. At least I gave comic making a try though.
Title: Delusion
I can't believe she's done it again. She's stood me up. I would normally forgive her being that she's always so busy. I know that she's leader both of Morning Musume and Hello! Project isn't an easy job and I understand that but if she couldn't make it today then she should have told me instead of telling me lies with false hope.
Today was supposed to be a special day for us. It's our anniversary. We have been together for five years but when she became leader everything changed. She barely has time to talk with me or go anywhere with me. It was like she didn't have time for me or for this relationship. I've considered breaking up with her but each time I've told her she begged me to stay with her and said that she loved me.
But, why does she always leave me for work? Why has she forgotten our date tonight? She promised me she would come. That she would not forget it. She was supposed to be here hours ago.
It's passed midnight and she still hasn't showed yet. I stare at my reflection in the mirror of my dresser and continue to brush my thick locks of straight brown hair. I haven't changed out of my dress. A part of me still feels that she'll show still. She'll come running through my room door telling me how sorry she is and ask me to forgive her and I will, because I love her.
I care for her even if she disappointed me. I can always look pass her mistakes and continue to love her. I've worked so hard on my make-up and hair that it would be a waste if she didn't get to see it.
I put down my brush and run my fingers through thick hair to see if I have gotten rid of all the unwanted knots. My fingers comb through the locks with ease. Satisfied with my results, I take a hair tie and begin to tie my hair into a loose bun.
“I'm sorry I couldn't make it.”
I turn around to the sound of the expected visitor. I sit here at a loss for words as we look at each other through the thick silence. She stands in the door way, leaning against the door frame while her eyes scatter nervously across the floor. She's flooded with guilt.
She had never intended to keep me waiting for this long. She wasn't even expecting herself to show and yet here she is. Apologizing to me like I knew she would. I watch her, waiting for her to say more than just a simple sorry.
She had me waiting for hours. I think I deserve more than an “I'm sorry.” Our night is ruined. Our anniversary is ruined. She finally looks at me from across the room and stands properly on her two feet.
“What took you so long this time?” I question. “You had me waiting for hours Ai-chan. Do you know that?”
“I'm sorry.” She whispers.
Is she going to go keep telling me she's sorry? It's all I hear from her now that she has all this responsibility to handle. Has she forgotten that I can help her? She doesn't have to be alone.
“You know I couldn't make it. Even if I wanted to.”
Ai-chan slowly walks towards me. Her stone hard stare softens to show the emotions her words could not. I've never seen her this emotionally stressed. There is something she needs to say, but she can't figure out the right words to say it. She stills owes me an explanation, but I have a feeling if she tells me I won't like it.
What is she hiding from me? What is she not telling me? Her hand goes to my shoulder, her touch far from affectionate.
It's apologetic and saddening. She squeezes my shoulder in a firm hold. I look back to her, clueless and afraid. Her face is so grave.
“What is that supposed to mean Ai-chan? You told me yourself you would be able to make it and here you are over five hours late.” I finally speak.
She gives me a sad smile and her eyes darken. She shakes her head.
“Risa, don't you think it's time to let go?” She whispers. “You can't stay like this forever. You're trapped. How can I rest if you're like this?”
“Stop speaking to me in riddles.” I demand.
She's always saying nonsense things like this to distract me just so she won't get into trouble. Each time it makes me angrier. Can't she for once stick up to her responsibility?! She's mature when it's Morning Musume related responsibility, but when it comes to our relationship she always wants out.
I've confronted her before, asking if she really wants to be with me. I think her being my girlfriend is just too difficult for her. I glare at Ai-chan, waiting for a reply. She's stood me up for hours the least she can do is answer my questions and do as I asked. Ai puts on a sad face.
It's a pitiful face. She isn't sad. Ai-chan is sad for me. She's showing me pity? The eye contact between us disappears when she looks out my balcony window.
“You never listen.” Ai-chan mumbles. “You never believe anything I tell you.”
I'm outraged this time. I stand out of my chair, knocking it over and march over to her. Oddly, my stomping and the knocked over table doesn't startle Ai-chan.
She continues to stare out the window, lost into the pale white moon in the glittered-star sky. My fist shake at my sides, but I control myself even if I want so badly to smack her.
“How can I believe anything you say or listen when every time you say you'll do something it's always broken!” I scream. “Ai-chan, do you even know what today is?” The anger inside me washes away and is replaced with sorrow.
I let out a loud sob and feel my face turn wet with tears. How can she? How can she just forget? Today is supposed to be special to me, to us. She promised! She said she would come to me!
We were supposed to have our day! Our special moment! Ai-chan ruined it! It's her fault. I nearly stumble to the ground overtaken from a wave of emotions.
I feel so many things at once that it makes my stomach twist and burn. I suddenly have the urge to vomit. I bite my bottom lip to contain myself, pushing myself to block all my emotions out. I stare at my girlfriend through a thick wall of tears. She just continues to stand perfectly still, like a beautiful marble statue, unaffected from my despair.
I just watch her, looking over every curve of her body. I take in her radiant soft skin. It's flawless. Perfect. She's always so perfect, but she never believed that.
She was too much of a perfectionist. My eyes move downward, noticing the dress she has on. That's the dress I bought her. The dress I gave her. I told Ai-chan to wear it today.
She remembered. I put on a painful smile, somewhat happy she listened to me. She knew this was important to me. Ai-chan wanted to make it perfect too.
As I reach further down the silk dress, I notice at the mid-section it's different. There's a stain. She dirtied it. The dark mark clashes with the dress with it's pitch black stain that's the size of a small puddle. I frown.
“It's ruined.” I mumble.
Ai-chan finally moves. She looks back at me with the same pitiful expression. I'm starting to hate that look and I'm starting to hate looking at her face. Bashfully, Ai-chan nods.
“I ripped it in some places too. I'm sorry Gaki-san.” Ai confirms.
“You keep saying that. When will you stop saying that?” I angrily reply.
“Until you start to believe me.” Ai quickly responds. “Until you let me go.”
Why does she keep saying that? What is she trying to say to me? Can't she for once stop these mind games?
“What?” I choke, shocked to such a statement. “Ai-chan, are you...breaking up with me?”
“No, Risa...” Ai-chan sighs. “Listen to me, you have to stop it! Snap out of it already! You're hurting yourself.”
I look down to my feet. I don't think I can stop myself now. I'm so angry. I knew she would do this.
I should have known. She's so scared the easy way out is to just leave. I let out a small chuckle. It's full of rage with cruel intention behind it.
“Get out.” I quietly say.
“Please, Risa-”
I couldn't stop myself. I finally reacted on my emotions. I didn't mean to do it, but it happened. It somehow happened without me being fully aware of my actions. Ai looks up at me with a hand on her face.
She starts to tear and I look back at her in shock. I slapped her. I actually did it. I hit her. Some how I think that hit hurt me more. I move my fingers, curling my hand into a fist and flinch.
It feels as if I punched a brick wall. A warm liquid begins to trickle down my knuckles. What's happening? Something isn't right. Ai-chan is changing. She looks so pale! She looks so ill.
“A-Ai-chan, you're bleeding!” I yell.
Thick trails of blood pours out from Ai-chan's mouth and her face is decorated with long slashes covered with dirt and gravel. There are even bits of metal all over her. She bends over, both her hands resting on her stomach. There's blood leaking through her fingers.
Her entire dress is caked in blood, but some of it looks like it isn't even hers. I start to cry. I'm stuck! I-I can't move.
I can't help her! She's going to die. Ai-chan is going to die if I don't help her! Why can't I move? Why can't I do anything?!
“Ai-chan!!” I scream.
The dull pain in my hand turns into a really sharp ache as if someone is stabbing my hand over and over. I pick it up to my face and notice that there are shards of glass between the knuckles. The back of my fist is completely covered in dark red blood.
How did this happen? I don't remember getting this. Did I punch glass? I look up at Ai-chan and notice that she's...disappearing! She's fading away! I can't believe what's happening.
“Ai-chan, don't leave! Please, Ai-chan don't leave me! I need you!” I beg. “Stay with me Ai-chan, please!”
“R-Risa!” she shouts back.
I can barely hear her. Why is she leaving again?! I can't stop crying. She's supposed to be here. She's supposed to keep her promise! She can't do that. Not ever, not today! Not on our anniversary.
“Risa!!” That voice didn't sound like her. Someone else is here?
Someone grabs my shoulders and shakes me and I blink away the tears to see. It isn't Ai-chan. I look at her, confused. Ai-chan isn't here? I look around me and see that I'm in my room like I knew I was.
Except, Ai-chan isn't here. There isn't any sign indicating that she ever came here. I can't smell her perfume and her cellphone decorated with charms at the end isn't on my nightstand like it usually is when she visits. Ai-chan never came here. It's like she never existed.
“Risa, can you hear me!?”
I look back in front of me. “What is it Eri?!” I angrily reply.
Eri looks at me as if I've got five heads. “I said we have to get you to a hospital. You might have broken your hand. What were you thinking when you punched your mirror!?” Eri explains.
I turn around and notice that the dresser mirror I was once staring at while brushing my hair is shattered into a bunch of pieces. I look back to my hand at my side. Did I do that?
That was never Ai-chan's face I slapped. It was my reflection that I hit? I close my eyes to stop the buzzing in my head and the spinning in my room. Something isn't right.
“You scared her away!” I blurt out.
“Huh? Gaki-san are you okay?!” Eri frantically says.
“Because of you, you scared Ai-chan away!” I blame. “Ai-chan was just here! She was here I saw her!”
Eri looks at me with a frightening face on. “Gaki-san what are you talking about?! Ai-chan was never here. She'll never be here Gaki-san.” She tries to explain. I furiously push Eri's hands off me.
“Stop lying Kame!” I demand.
I don't want to listen to her. I don't have to listen to Eri. I'm her senpai! She's supposed to listen to me and respect me.
She isn't supposed to lie to me! Eri has always been honest. Why is she lying now? This isn't funny!
“Tell me the truth Eri!” I order. “Tell me the truth!”
“Gaki-san, she's dead!” Eri admits.
I stare at her, frozen as my mind enters into a state of panic. That isn't true. T-That never happened! It didn't!
Eri starts to cry, but I can't understand why she's crying. She's not the one being lied to and having her heart crushed into hundreds of pieces. She isn't the one who might have lost her girlfriend!
“She died, Gaki-san. three years ago.” Eri whispers, no longer looking me in the eye. “From a train accident. It came off the tracks. A large piece of steel went through her stomach. It was a quick death.”
“T-That isn't true! None of that is true!!!” I deny, jumping out of my chair. “Stop telling me these lies Eri.”
Eri starts to cry even harder. “It's the truth, Gaki-san! I'm sorry.” Eri says with her most honest face. “I-I know I shouldn't have told you this. Reina told me not to, but...I had to. I couldn't pretend with you anymore. Not after you've hurt yourself. I'm afraid...you'll kill yourself Gak-san, or hurt someone.” Eri starts to hiccup through her furious crying. I've never seen her this hurt. “Every year you do this. You act out the same night Ai-chan died. She was supposed to meet you here for your fifth anniversary.”
This isn't real. That's a lie! Ai-chan...I was talking to her just a second ago! It felt so real!! She was here!
I saw her! How cans he be dead?! A train? A train killed her? I fall to the floor, weeping.
My Ai-chan...taken away from me! Gone. Eri comes over and hugs me. She holds me as I shake, trying to calm. I can hear her saying she's sorry over and over.
It doesn't matter though. It'll never matter how sorry she is for lying to me. Because Ai-can is not here and she'll never come here.
She'll never come back. It was a dream. Everything I did and said was just me...talking to myself all this time? I imagined everything.
“Ai-chan.” I cry.
Why did she have to leave? Why did she have to leave me? I should have died too.
I should have died with her. Without her, I have nothing left. Everything is meaningless.
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:cry: :cry: :dizzy: :err: :fainted: :imdead: So sad.
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*died with Ai*
Noooooooo! I wanna happily ever after TakaGaki :cry: But emo Risa is good too hehe
Oh new page gets! :cow:
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whaa-? eh...? why...gaki-san...? why....ai...? :gmon tears:
i believed that there're someone like gaki-san in this world. because, love is a magical things, it could bring people to heaven and hell at the same time. actually, i am admire gaki-san loves toward ai in this story because, it isnt easy to love one person for your whole life and to death...literally. her love is so great till she cant seem to let go and having a delusion of ai. i wonder if everyone in this world has that great of love, maybe...this world will be at peace somehow. i'm liking gaki-san's love but i dont like if she's wasting her life like that. i want to say something like this sort of words,'i know how it feels but, you have to get a hold of yourself. move on, live. ai wouldnt want you to waste your life like this' to her. but i cant because i cant feel what she felt..and that will felt ignorant if i said something like that. thus, i believe ai wouldn't want her to waste her life like that because after all, no matter how ugly this world is without ai, life is a gift.
sorry, my comments seem strange ^^;;
and, i enjoy this fic, sankyuu for your hard work :gmon peakaboo:
ah, for now, i will wait patiently till your next update.
junkie-san ganbare~ ^o^)/
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Can't say I didn't see that coming, but it was a good read. Why would you say it was crap?
Good luck on your next comic installment.
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Okay, what is this? I thought I already wrote a comment for this, but I didn't! :bleed eyes: I owe you a lot of comments junkie! :cry: So yay, late thanks for TakaGaki update! :cow:
For this oneshot I have mixed feelings. In one hand, I love angst. I like a lot the idea of this story too. In the other hand... YOU BROKE TAKAGAKI AND KILLED AI-CHAN :cry: :cry: You made my inner fangirl cry. It's so sad. Why is always Ai who dies? WHY? ;___;
“You know I couldn't make it. Even if I wanted to.”
When I read that, and remembered the title of the fic, I already figured out what was happening :cry: But that only made all worse. My poor poor Gaki, denying so hard the cruel reality is heartbreaking. And Ai-chan, even if is just a product of her imagination, an illusion... is so painful reading her like that :cry: Her spirit won't rest in peace until Gaki accepts it ;__; And the worse is that Risa have been like that for a long time... The dress part and then the blood, was specially :pleeease: :pleeease: .I know I shouldn't have freaked out because I knew already Ai was dead but anyway... ;_;
And then Eririn is there and the illusion is gone :cry: And Gaki angry with her ;_; aklsandfaskjfdn Too much sadness and drama! :cry: The ending is even sadder than what I expected. Because Gaki doesn't seem like she is going to overcome this trauma anytime soon. I mean, it has been already three years and she is still like that... I don't see her getting better. That's why that ending was specially painful, you just showed us how traumatized Gaki is (and you traumatized me along the way too ;_;), but it's like there is no hope for her.
Why did she have to leave? Why did she have to leave me? I should have died too.
I should have died with her. Without her, I have nothing left. Everything is meaningless.
That's what I mean. NO HOPE, ONLY SADNESS! :on speedy: :on speedy: You are evil junkie, you crushed my little heart and then you stepped on it :cry:
But yeah, I love angst. So I love this :heart: But I demand something fluffy next time XD! I'll be waiting for our next update ~
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ackkkk... I really am going to sit my ass down and get some commenting done for tonight XD
SO JUNKIE-CHAN'S ONE-SHOTS FIRST! :heart:
A Runner's Prize:
So. We all know how I feel about KameShige by now, so I won't go into too much detail (not as much as you did with the delicious perv xD) about that...
But... yeah. Youthful KameShige in love; still so fresh and vibrant - absolutely adorable. :wub:
“Well...I like that you're reliable, trustworthy,...and beautiful both inside and out.” Eri said, with a dreamy smile in place. “I love you, Sayumin.”
I will never tire of hearing Eri say she loves Sayu. :w00t:
And the perv. :drool: :drool: :drool:
You are good at writing them, my friend. :lol:
I always enjoy detail when it comes to writing, so I was very happy with the perv that we got for this. ^___^
What I can't wait is for you to post the sequel to this, because of what I've seen of it so far, it is even better; the tension and angst between KameShige in tthat is SO, SO SEXY. :inlove:
I'll be waiting patiently until you update this thread with that. :P
Delusion:
What mood were YOU in when you wrote this?!
:bleed eyes: :bleed eyes: :bleed eyes:
You know, I do love my angst... but this turned out to be just a tad more depressing than I initially thought :sweatdrop:
I wasn't sure exactly what was going on... until about this line:
“Risa, don't you think it's time to let go?” She whispers. “You can't stay like this forever. You're trapped. How can I rest if you're like this?”
I wonder if anybody managed to guess before this? XD
Thick trails of blood pours out from Ai-chan's mouth and her face is decorated with long slashes covered with dirt and gravel. There are even bits of metal all over her. She bends over, both her hands resting on her stomach. There's blood leaking through her fingers.
:OMG: :OMG: :OMG:
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But good detail. :lol:
“She died, Gaki-san. three years ago.” Eri whispers, no longer looking me in the eye.
You're kidding??? :fainted:
Gaki-san's been this deluded for THREE whole years? The poor girl! :cry:
I should have died with her. Without her, I have nothing left. Everything is meaningless.
Doom and gloom. There is not one piece of happiness, not one glint of hope in this one-shot. I don't know if that kind of angst is the kind that I could enjoy... but you know, I liked the piece anyway. Because deep inside, I still have hope...
I hope TakaGaki here have a happier life together in heaven. =______________________________=
I can't imagine Gaki-san living the rest of her life like this; nor can I imagine her being able to move on. I mean, people are usually relatively okay with deaths at around 6 months following, but look at Gaki-san here and her three-years-afterwards-state. :mon scare:
*runs off to cry in a corner*
*runs back to say something to junkie-chan*
A happier one next time, okay? :mon cute: