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Title: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki, TanaKame] Update - Chapter 16 (5/30)
Post by: XcuteX26262X on November 13, 2010, 04:01:12 PM
Hey guys~
I originally posted this on LiveJournal, but with different characters, and I thought you guys may be interested, so I'm going to post it here. I have to warn you that my English is not perfect, so please excuse any mistakes.  :nervous
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Warning: Strong language.

Chapter 1

"Ai-chan, I’m so sorry!"
 
She was standing outside my house, crying her eyes out, hoping for me to open the door so we could talk, but there is no way in hell I’m opening that door for her.
 
 
[Flash back]

"Ai-chan, I love you."
"I love you too."
"I'm going to be with you forever no matter what."

[End of flash back]

 
Ha! Forever my ass! Does she really think that I’m going to open the door for her? It's been two hours already, leave! Dammit, leave! Your crying is not going to make me feel bad. "Ai-chan, please open the door, please please please!" Oh my god, this is really starting to piss me off! Do I really? Why should I? "Ai-chan, I’m going to kill myself if you don't open this door right now!"
 
"Fine, kill yourself! See If I care."
 
And then, there was silence...Wait, she didn't kill herself...Did she?
I rushed to the door and opened it just to be jumped on by her. "Ai-chan, I'm so sorry, please forgive me." I didn't say anything, I was just standing there letting her tears soak through my new shirt, I just bought it and it's quite expensive. After maybe three minutes, she finally backed away with her eyes red from crying, she looked scary. I’ve never seen her like this before. "Ai-chan, please say something!" I finally talked. "What do you want me to say? That everything is going to be okay?"
 
"Ai-chan, I’m sorry."
 
"Will you stop apologizing? It's really annoying and it's not going to work." I said without showing any sympathy. She's the one who made me like this. She promised that we'll be together forever, and I was dumb enough to believe her. I thought I was in love with her, but I guess I was wrong. Love is not real; you only see 'love' in cheesy Hollywood movies. It’s just a myth. "Ai-chan, I made a huge mistake."
 
"Yes, you did. Now what do you want?"
 
And then tears stared running down her cheeks...Oh man, not again! "Why are you crying again?" I said with an angry tone and that only made her cry even more. "I lov-"
 
"Don't you dare say that!" I cut her off before she could finish that sentence. "Why are you here at the first place? Aren't you supposed to be with him… in your honeymoon?" She looked up and said “....I left him."
 
I was shocked when she said that, but happy at the same time, I don't know why but I was happy… “I left him because I couldn't live with him for the rest of my life...Ai-chan, I'm still in love with you...I’ve made the biggest mistake of my life by leaving you..." As If I wasn't shocked enough! What the hell am I supposed to say next? I miss you? I love you? I want you back…? Oh hell no! “Are you done? Is that it? Well, you should go home now, because it's getting late." She was about to cry, but thank god she didn't. “Fine, but before I go I just want to let you know that I love you and I'm sorry for breaking your heart. One day you'll find a better person who will treat you right..."
 
I don't know why, but I wanted to cry...and then...Tears were running down my face like silent raindrops. She hugged me, but I pushed her away because I won't let her play with my feelings again. Never. "Leave!" I said while I was crying. "JUST LEAVE!" I screamed. She had no choice but to leave. "Risa!" I shouted, there was something I wanted to tell her...
She turned to me with teary eyes "What Ai-chan?"
 
“I hope you die and rot in hell!"
 
I gave up my career for you; I gave up my whole fucking life for you. Because of you my parents rejected me, they kicked me out of the house, they erased me from their memories, but most of all they hated me! That's all because of you.
You know, 'hate' is a big word, you should never use it, but I mean it when I say: "Risa, I hate you!" I really mean it, and I hope one day you'll feel the same way I feel right now. Heartbroken, lonely, depressed, angry, weak, suicidal, and the list could go on and on...
 
“Fuck you, you whore, I don't want you back...”

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So...? Did you guys like it, hate it? Do you want me to finish writing it? Do you think my English is bad? I do  :(
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki]
Post by: Haruka on November 13, 2010, 06:13:09 PM
WOW...

It was another point of view XD from the Magical relationship to a sadness and despair one  ._.

I like it, but well I'm a fairytale fics freak XD that means I love happy endings XD

Even with all that I like the way Ai.Chan didn't forgive her =D
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki]
Post by: writerjunkie on November 13, 2010, 07:40:43 PM
This is a great start!! I don't think many TakaGaki fics now start with them being anst so I'm glad to have read this one starting like this. I look forward to the next chapter! :D :thumbsup
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki]
Post by: xxkaori-kittyxx on November 13, 2010, 10:44:49 PM
Omg it's only been one chapter and I'm already hooked lol  :lol:
You should keep going  :)...... plz
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki]
Post by: SarangAi on November 13, 2010, 10:46:40 PM
I don't think your English is that bad!  :P

and I'm definitely hooked... Aichan doesn't want to fall for Risa's old tricks (whatever they are) again, but she still loves, I think....  :cry:

i'll wait for updates~  :cow:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki]
Post by: fallenxangel24952 on November 13, 2010, 11:18:46 PM
okay I like it :twothumbs

so please keep going on XD XD XD

and like it how you start the story :P

Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki]
Post by: rndmnwierd on November 14, 2010, 05:19:05 AM
Your English is fine, better than some of my friends even! XD

This is really a good hook, not too many Takagaki fics start out this way, so I'm interested to see where this is going.
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki]
Post by: Beecubed on November 14, 2010, 06:54:40 AM
~WHOA there...

 XD

Nice to see a new fic from you, cute... (I'll just call you that to make it easy xD).

That beginning was pretty intense T____T


"Risa!" I shouted, there was something I wanted to tell her...

She turned to me with teary eyes "What Ai-chan?"
 
“I hope you die and rot in hell!"

 :OMG:

*splutters* WHAT?!

>.<

I feel like we have a long way to go before Ai's heart can be mended... that is, if it ever will be. :/

But I'm interested. Anything TakaGaki shamelessly interests me  :lol:
You do have quite a promising start. I'd really like to find out what exactly happened between them for them to have ended up like this... how Gaki could ever leave Ai-chan to get married with a man. NANI?! She was drunk? Possessed? Blackmailed? Something along those lines? @___@

And yeah, your English is fine. Perfectly understandable. Don't feel bad... there's always room for improvement (and that's the case with every writer), but it's not the end of the world, you learn as you go! Good luck!

Waiting for your next update!
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki]
Post by: kano-chan on November 14, 2010, 10:02:12 AM
I had a bad feeling when I saw the "I Don't Want You Back" title. :lol: And you weren't kidding about the strong language. XD

Well, that was just really intense and sad! :cry: What Ai-chan said was super harsh, but can't really blame her since she sacrificed so many important things in her life for Gaki, who went off with some dude.

Please continue with the story! :twothumbs And I hope they would have a happy ending. :mon pray2:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki]
Post by: XcuteX26262X on November 14, 2010, 02:25:07 PM
@Haruka, writerjunkie, SarangAi, fallenxangel24952, rndmnwierd: Thank you guys so much for your replies <3

@Beecubed: Thank you <3 Blackmailed...? You just gave me an idea... :mon evil:

@kano-chan: lol yeah, I had to warn you about the strong language. XD
A happy ending? Well, you'll have to wait and see :D
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Warning: Strong language.

Chapter 2


[Flashback]

“Fuck you, you whore. I don’t want you back...”

[End of flashback]


Ai’s POV

I meant what I said, but why does it hurt so much? I mean, she deserves it. She broke my heart, she left me for someone else…she left me for a guy! She lied to me about who she really is. She told me that she likes girls, but if that’s true, then why was she sleeping with a guy? WHY did she marry a guy? God, I’m so confused…and why the hell Am I thinking about her right now?
Get a hold of yourself! You just ended things with her. You told her that you don’t want to see her again, but why do I have a feeling that I have made a mistake? Screw this. I’m going to bed.

~*~

It was 3 am, she kept rolling in her bed, she couldn’t sleep, she kept remembering what Risa had told her: “I left him because I couldn’t live with him for the rest of my life…Ai-chan, I’m still in love with you…I’ve made the biggest mistake of my life by leaving you.”
Ai finally gave up on trying to sleep. “If only I hadn’t told her that I was in love with her when she was dating that dickwad…”

[Five months ago.]

“ Ah~ I can finally sleep.” Ai jumped on her king size bed happy. She was finally going to sleep after an exhausted day. She started drifting off, when suddenly…
Ring Ring
“You’ve got to be kidding me!” She tried to ignore the sound, but it kept ringing and ringing and… ringing. “That’s it!” She jumped off her bed and ran to where the annoying sound was coming from. She was about to say a lot of things an idol shouldn’t say to whoever was calling her, but when she saw the calling ID, she smiled…

“Hello Risa~.”
“Hi, I’m sorry. Were you asleep?”
“No. What’s up?” okay that was a lie, but whatever. She thought to herself. “Thank god, I’m fine. I just want to talk to you…” She called, because she wants to talk to me. Of course she wants to talk, that’s why people call each other you dumb shit! “Okay, what do you want to talk about?” trying to sound as cool as she could, but failing miserably. “I don’t really know…Do you want to hang out?” Is she asking me out on a date? She started grinning like an idiot. “Yeah, that would be amazing.” “Awesome, because I think it’s been a long time since we hung out." Yeah, it’s been a long time… “Ever since you stared dating that dickwad” She mumbled.
“What was that?”
“Huh? Um, nothing HAHAHA” Ai mentally slapped herself for saying that. “Anyways, how about we go to the cinema?” ”Ye-“ Risa interrupted her, before she could finish. “Awesome! There is this new movie about two people falling in love, and then getting married.” Wow! The story is so not predictable…Ai thought raising a brow.” That’s sounds great!” She answered with a mocking voice. “It’s a romantic movie.” Really? I thought it was horror… “I love romantic movies!” I hate those mushy movies…

Risa and Ai started talking about stuff that neither of them really cared about. The only thing that mattered to them was that there was no awkwardness between them anymore. They haven’t been able to talk like this, mostly because Ai was ignoring Risa. Every time they see each other, Ai would turn around and walk away. It’s not because she didn’t want to see her, it’s because she couldn't. It hurt her so much; knowing that they will never be together hurt her so damn much. Every time Risa talks about him, every time Risa thinks about him, every time Risa calls him, hugs him, kisses him. Every single time, Ai would feel her heart being stabbed all over again. But not anymore, because she has moved on… or at least that’s what she wants to believe. 
                                                          "Moving on, is a simple thing, what it leaves behind is hard."
                                                                                                                                                 -???

To be continued…
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 2
Post by: rndmnwierd on November 14, 2010, 06:37:57 PM
Ai'a hurt, so she wants to hurt Risa too. Makes sense, keep going!
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 2
Post by: fallenxangel24952 on November 14, 2010, 08:23:13 PM
so before they are goin' out risa already have a boyfriend :shocked :shocked :shocked

ahh~ I don't know give me the next chapter XD XD XD
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 2
Post by: kano-chan on November 14, 2010, 11:34:39 PM
Wow...Ai-chan is so full of yankii-ness in this story. 8)2

Ai-chan thinks that she might have made a mistake, so that's definitely going to change somethings... :D

**waits**
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 2
Post by: oddball on November 15, 2010, 04:43:37 PM
Man poor Ai is definatly upset at Gaki!, she had a boyfriend before dating Ai as well as laeving Ai for a guy, that's got to be pretty tough on Ai, no wonder she's acting like such a Yankii!

But then, Ai chan can't get the thought that Gaki made a mistake out of her mind.....
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 2
Post by: XcuteX26262X on November 15, 2010, 05:56:50 PM
@rndmnwierd: I'm glad it makes sense :) I will keep going. Thank you. :heart:

@fallenxangel24952: Yup.  :twisted:

@kano-chan: Yes, she is. Yankii Aichan rocks  :rockon:

@oddball: She left him for the same guy. Gaki made a mistake, but she had her reasons...What are the reasons? Now that's the real question  :twisted:
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Warning: Strong language.

Chapter 3


Ai’s POV

I saw her waiting for me outside the theater. I smiled, and as I was walking up to her, that smile was replaced with frown when I saw him, placing his arms around her waist and giving her a kiss on the back of her head. “What the hell is he doing here?” I felt my eyes becoming watery, I wanted to cry. Seeing him made me so mad, I wanted to pull Risa away from him, because she’s supposed to be with me, not him. She’s mine!
I turned around, and was ready to leave; that’s when I heard her calling my name “Ai-chan!” Damn! I should have walked faster. I turned around with a fake smile on my face “Oh, Risa!” acting all surprised. I knew those acting lessons would pay off someday. She started running towards me, and gave me a hug “Ai-chan, you’re here. I’ve been waiting for you.” She backed away and looked at me “what’s wrong?” “What do you mean? Nothing is wrong…” please don’t ask anymore questions, or else I’m going to end up crying, because seeing you right now is hurting me. Seeing you with him is killing me.I knew she didn’t believe me, but she chose not to ask anymore questions.
“It's been almost a month.” “Yeah…” One month, one painful month… “Ai-chan, I’ve really missed you.” She looked at me with sad eyes, I could see that she really misses me, but I can’t do anything about it. I’m sorry. She was about to give me another hug, but that bastard chose to ruin it. “Hi!” “Oh hi, babe.” She gave him a quick peck on the lips then turned to me. “Ai-chan, this is my very handsome boyfriend…” as if that peck didn’t piss me off, they chose to make out in front of me, now, I was furious! I wanted to blow his fucking head with a shotgun! But where can I possibly get one? … Where is Reina when you need her?
After probably twenty seconds of making out, they finally, FINALLY broke away from the kiss. I swear, they wouldn’t have broken away from it if I hadn’t cleared my throat. Risa, why are you doing this to me? You’re torturing me. They looked very embarrassed after their make out session. Risa was looking at the ground with her face burning red, and that bastard was…smirking? I've had enough of this. I’m leaving. “Um, I’m sorry, but I just remembered that I have some business to take care of at the agency. I have to go.” I have some business to take care of alright! I'm borrowing Reina’s shotgun! Risa looked up, she was about to say something, but by then I had already turned around and started walking. “But_” I didn’t bother to turn around and listen to her, I just wanted to leave. Fast.
I’m sorry Risa…
~*~
I didn’t know where I was, all I could remember was that my head felt like it was about to explode, and I felt like throwing up. I tried opening my eyes, but couldn’t. The lights were too strong.
“Where the hell am I?” I thought I was alone, but apparently I wasn't. “You’re at my place.” “WHAT THE FUCK?!” I swear, I thought I was going to have a heart attack. “What a beautiful man scream… and ‘fuck’ is bad word.” What the… Wait, who the hell is she? “Who are you?” I tried seeing who that person was, but my blurry vision didn’t help. “My name is Eri, and I saved you.”  Saved me from what? It’s like quote from a cheesy low budget movie. "I saved you." Oh, please.
“What?” what is she talking about? “You see, I’m a waitress. You came to the place I work at, and you were drinking too much. Guys were trying to do stuff to you, and I saved you. You should really consider quitting alcohol. It’s really bad for you.” Wow! She “saved” me, and now she wants me to stop drinking? Who the hell does she think she is? My mother? “Umm, thanks for ‘saving’ me mother. But I could’ve taken care of it.”  “Yeah, right! You asked them if they had condoms…” Oh my god, please tell me this is a dream. Yeah, this is a dream; I’m going to wake up at any second now…come on wake up! “You’re not dreaming.” She said boldly. She could have at least let me pretend it was a dream. Dammit. I don’t know what’s bad enough; the fact that I had asked them for condoms, or the fact that they were guys! I hate men! I was about to do…things with them. Oh god, just thinking about it makes me want to kill myself…but before doing that, blowing that bastard’s head off with Reina’s shot gun. Gimme a Hell Yeah!
“Well, I’m sorry for interrupting your thoughts, but since you’re awake now, I think you should leave.” Ouch. “Yeah, sorry.” As soon as I got up, and was about to leave her place, she stopped me. “Um, can…I know…your name?” I could’ve sworn I saw her blushing, but I didn't think too much about it. “I’m Ai, Takahashi Ai.” I smiled faintly at her before closing the door. She’s cute…
~*~
4:30 AM
After leaving her place and walking in the rain for 40 minutes, I finally reached my apartment. “Tadaima!” but was greeted back with darkness and silence. I don’t even know why I bother saying that every time, it’s not like my parents are going to appear from nowhere and greet me back. Sometimes I feel so pathetic. I walked to the living room, and stood there, looking at the family picture, regretting the decision I’ve made by staying here in Japan, while my family are in the US. “I wish I was with you guys right now…” I just stood there staring, when suddenly I felt cold. I forgot that my clothes were damped from the rain earlier. I started walking to my room, but when I saw my bed, my huge, awesome bed. I didn’t feel like changing anymore, I just wanted to sleep. “You ARE going to change your clothes before going to bed, aren’t you?” Freaking stupid voice in my head, always telling what to do! I didn’t have to listen to it, but somehow, it sounds just like Risa’s. I quickly walked to my closet, snatched out my red pajamas, and went to the bathroom to change. I don’t know why I always change in the bathroom, even though I do live alone. But somehow I get this strange feeling as if someone is watching me…Great, now i'm becoming paranoid!

To be continued…
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Next is Risa's POV   :byebye:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 3
Post by: kuro808 on November 15, 2010, 11:34:05 PM
Chapter 1 & 2

incredible start on the story, although a TakaGaki story with conflict is soooooooooooo good

Chapter 3

Meeting Eri in such a way is incredibly interesting, and Ai becoming a total ass-kicking bitch XD
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 3
Post by: Mkame on November 16, 2010, 01:08:32 AM
This is a really interesting story! The opening really caught my attention and the progress seems interesting, I wonder how TakaGaki will happen (only to fall to ruin). :w00t:

I like the way you portray Ai! It was interesting to see her so... mean. Though her language was surprisingly vulgar xD. I loved the line about wanting to find Reina for a shotgun. And AiEri interacting 8Db If my attention span can surpass a 5 year old's, I will definitely be following this fic!
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 3
Post by: kano-chan on November 16, 2010, 07:07:25 AM
This is the most badass Ai-chan ever in all of the stories I've read! :shocked: She asked them if they had codos?? :shocked :bleed eyes:

Looks like Eri's got a little crush on Ai-chan there... :inlove: Maybe we'll see her in the future? :roll:

But the scene with Gaki and her boyfriend making out in front of Ai-chan is just so.... :mon annoy: I was like, ohmygosh! Really?! She didn't love Ai-chan at that time? :O That was just messed up; that scene.... :angry:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 3
Post by: oddball on November 16, 2010, 01:36:52 PM
Man poor Ai-chan having to watch Gaki make out with her boyfriend right infront of you  :OMG:  , don't worry I have a shotgun you can borrow!  :angry:

Seems like Ai is also a drinker as well as a bit of a Yankii in this fic, luckily Eri was there to save her, and Ai thought she was quite cute, I wonder what sort of role Eri will play from here on in?

Is Ai really becoming paranoid, or perhaps Risa still has something she want's to say to Ai?


Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 3
Post by: XcuteX26262X on November 16, 2010, 05:36:37 PM
@kurosawa87,Mkame: Thank you.   :)

@kano-chan: Eri she has a crush on her, and yes there will be AiEri. The kissing scene made me mad, even though i'm the one who wrote it  XD

@oddball: Eri will play a very, VERY interesting role...  :twisted:
Risa is still not sure about her feelings for Ai-chan, to her, she's only a friend, but who knows? Maybe she secretly loves her, but just won't admit it. You'll have to wait and see  :D
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Chapter 4


Risa’s POV

“But_” I tried stopping her from leaving, but she didn’t even bother to turn around. I’m so hurt right now. Why is she acting like this? Did I do something wrong? Did I hurt her without realizing it? What did I do to make her act so strange? It’s like she doesn’t want us to be friends anymore. Ever since I started dating him, she had started ignoring me. Why Ai-chan? Why?
A kiss on my cheek stopped my train of thoughts. “You look so distant. What’s wrong?” I felt myself blushing like crazy, but thank god for the turned off lights in my apartment. I didn’t want him to see me like this, even though he told me that I he likes it when I’m blushing…
“Um, I’m fine.” He gave me a look. But I tried to ignore it and focus my gaze on the TV. “I don’t believe you, but I just like you too much to ask anymore questions…” I felt his arms around my waist, as he turned me to face him. “Baby, you know you can talk to me about anything, right?” “Yeah, I know…” “It’s okay if you don’t want to tell me. I’m not going to force you, but I just want to let you know that I’m always going to be by your side.” When he said that, I felt like crying, because it reminded me of when Ai-chan and I were close. She would tell me the exact same thing. I tried to stop the tears, but they kept falling. He held me in his arms and started patting my head and stroking my short hair.  “It’s okay…just let it out.” That night, I cried in his arms until I fell asleep.
Ai-chan, why are you doing this to me?

~*~

Everything was spinning around me. I couldn’t see, I couldn’t hear, and I couldn’t breathe. How did I fell? Someone has pushed me…but who? I kept desperately struggling for air. I needed to breathe, I desperately needed to breathe. I tried my best to reach the top, but failed. Someone was holding my legs and pulling me back every time I was close. Blood started pouring out of my nose, that’s when I knew my end was near…
“Risa!” a voice, a familiar voice was calling my name. “Risa, can you hear me?” it kept calling. “Risa, wake up!” the person who the voice belonged to was now shaking me. Suddenly, I felt a burning sensation on my right cheek. Someone has slapped me…I found myself on my bed, terrified, soaked in my own sweat, and that’s when I realized it wasn’t real, none of that was really happening. It was a dream…a very scary dream. I was having a nightmare…a nightmare that until today I can never fully escape, nor can I understand.

~*~

“Risa, are you sure you’re okay?” She’s been asking the same question over, over, and over again. How many times do I have to reply with the same answer? “Sayu, I’m fine. Really, it was just a dream!” “But Risa_” I cut her off before she could finish. “No buts! Look Sayu, I understand that you’re worried about me, but this is really starting to get annoying! It was JUST a dream! So please, I’m begging you…stop.” She looked at me with a shocked impression. I’ve never been this harsh on her before, I couldn’t help it. She made me lose my temper. She’s an amazing friend, but sometimes she needs to know when to just back off! Her gaze started shifting to the ground, which made me feel even more horrible. “Sayu, I’m sorr_” She immediately looked up and smiled “It’s okay, it was my fault. I’m the one who should be sorry…” Awesome, just awesome. Now, I feel like the biggest butthole on the face of planet. How can a person be so sweet after hearing such harsh words? I can never fully understand Sayumi. First, when I had rejected her feelings, she acted as if nothing had happened. I thought she was going to hate me, but she did the opposite; she’s the one who set me up on a blind date with a guy, who’s now my lovely boyfriend. And now, after losing my temper with her... Sayu, why are you so nice?

~*~

Sayu and I spend the whole day shopping for new clothes. I’m not so fond of it; I’d rather chew on broken glass than shopping, But you know Sayu…she wouldn’t take no for an answer. “Today was so much fun!” I had to agree with her, it was fun. “Yeah, thank you for today, spending the day with you made me forget about Ai-cahn…” I shouldn’t have said that, because it only made me feel sad; knowing that I might have something to do with Ai-chan’s behavior. Yup, it made me feel like crap. Sayu must have noticed, because she leaned closer and gave me an embrace. “Gaki-san, everything between you and Ai-chan is going to be okay. I promise.” Hugging her felt so nice, in times like these all I want is for someone to be with me, telling that everything is going to be okay. Ai-chan, I want you to be the one who’s doing that. We both pulled away from the hug and I could feel myself 100 percent better. I swear, whenever Sayu gives me hug, all my worries and pain disappear “Thank you Sayu, I really mean it.” “That’s what friends are for.” She simply replied.
It was getting late, Sayu decided to go home, but before that, she gave me another hug and did one of her peace signs. I couldn’t help but smile, she’s so adorable, I don’t get why so many girls hate her.

~*~

“Tadaima!”  I was expecting Kei to be there, but I guess I was wrong...again! Lately he’s been acting strange. Always sneaking out in the middle of the night, spending the whole day with his friends… or at least that’s what he’s been telling me. I love him; he’s a great guy, but I just don’t get it. I feel like he’s hiding something from me. God, what have I done to deserve this?

~*~

I was going to call Ai-chan, but I knew she wouldn’t pick it up, just like every time. So I decided that tomorrow I’m going to visit her, and we’re going to talk about what’s been bothering her whether she likes it or not! I’m not leaving until she tells me why she’s been ignoring me! Ai-chan, tomorrow, you will tell me what’s wrong. You can't keep doing this to me. Tomorrow, I WILL know the truth...

To be continued…
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Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 4
Post by: kuro808 on November 16, 2010, 08:14:42 PM
Gaki seems to be apologetic about her current situation, but I guess her love is better than the strong friendship, I guess Sayu is justing taking her side because no one else was seemingly around, I guess but I think Risa should try again and Eri might give Ai a push to that direction too
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 4
Post by: fallenxangel24952 on November 16, 2010, 09:42:41 PM
^
same opinion :)
hope KameShige could help TakaGaki :twothumbs
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 4
Post by: kano-chan on November 17, 2010, 01:47:55 AM
Agh...! Something tells me that Kei is cheating on Gaki... ;) She didn't even love Ai-chan yet, it seems... :(
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 4
Post by: SarangAi on November 17, 2010, 04:18:00 AM
aahhh!  Things are warming up now.  Kei is fishy and Risa's is worried and Ai is depressed... things will happen soon!  :twothumbs
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 4
Post by: oddball on November 17, 2010, 01:02:16 PM
Hmm, Gaki's boyfriend Kei dosn't seem like the bastard Ai has mad him out to be in the first part of this chapter, but then he's also been acting strange, could he already be cheating on Gaki?

Sayu seems like a great friend for Gaki and comforts her well when Gaki is upset about Ai, Poor Gaki dosn't have a clue why Ai is angry at her and desperatly wants to find out why.

So it actually was Gaki in Ai's bedroom, blimey is that conversation going to be awkward or what?  :panic:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 4
Post by: XcuteX26262X on November 17, 2010, 04:58:39 PM
@kurosawa87, fallenxangel24952, kano-chan, SarangAi, oddball: Thank you for your replies. You guys make me happy!  :D
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Warning: Strong language.

Chapter 5

Eri's POV


“Um, can…I know…your name?”
“I’m Ai, Takahashi Ai.”


Takahashi Ai. That’s her name. The girl that I’ve been thinking about ever since that day. She’s so beautiful, amazing, cute, hot, attractive, sexy, has a nice butt that I couldn’t stop starring at…okay ignore the last part. What? Don’t tell me that you wouldn’t do the same thing! Okay, I’m going to stop now, because this is just too awkward. I’m usually not perverted, but I can’t help it. She’s so…I can’t describe it! I want to see her again, but how am I supposed to do that? Damn! I should’ve taken her number, but that probably would’ve scared her. I’m pretty sure she was already scared, judging from the way she screamed when I opened my mouth to answer her question; “What a beautiful man scream…” I giggled to myself remembering what I had told her. What a beautiful man scream…and something about fuck being a bad word.

Takahashi Ai, don’t worry. I’ll erase all your pain. I’ll make you forget about the person who’s been hurting you so bad. I’ll make you smile again, just wait for me. You and I will be together forever, no matter what. You’ll be mine, and I’ll be yours. I’m going to make whoever that person is regret what they have been doing to you. I’ll make sure that they will be sorry for hurting you. That’s a promise, and when I make a promise, I don’t break it.

[Flash back]
“Hey! Get away from her!” I said anger boiling inside of me. I’ve seen enough of this!
The two guys looked at me and one of them replied; “mind your own business. She wants this, and we want to give her what she wants. Now go bring us some more alcohol, and be the good little slut you are.” Slut?! Did he just call me a slut? That’s it! I was about the punch that disgusting human being in the face so hard, then cut his fingers off and feed them to his friend! “What? You look mad. Did I say something wrong? Or maybe you want to join us…you see, I have no problem with foursomes...” That was it, I couldn’t hold my anger any longer, I kicked him as hard as I could in his crotch. He fell to the ground screaming in pain.
“YOU BITCH!” his friend tried to throw a punch at me but failed, I pushed him, witch made him fall to the ground next to his friend who was still holding his crotch area. I took that chance to grab the girl’s hand and run with her out of the bar. I heard the manager yelling at me; “ERI!!” but I could care less about that horny bastard. I had to get her out of there.
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We’ve reached my place quickly, and she’s been sleeping ever since. She slept peacefully, and I couldn’t help but stare at her. “She’s beautiful…” I said loud without realizing it, and then covered my mouth fearing that she might have heard me. “Risa…” I froze. “Risa, why are you doing this to me?” I started freaking out. What the hell is going on? “Don’t you know how much I love you?” she’s dreaming… “WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS TO ME?” tears started running down her face uncontrollably, I wanted to do something, but my body was telling me otherwise… I just listened. “WHY ARE SO BLIND? RISA I’M IN LOVE WITH YOU! WHY CAN’T YOU SEE THAT?” I felt so bad for her; she must be in so much pain. “WHY DID YOU CHOOSE HIM OVER ME? WHAT DOES HE HAVE THAT I DON’T?” the tears that I’ve been holding back were no longer contained. I walked closer to her, and gave her a tight warm embrace. She retuned it, and started sobbing in my arms. I tried to calm her down, but she kept crying, her hot tears soaking through the jacket I was wearing. The girl and I cried in each other’s arms. Her tears of sorrow, and my tears of sadness.
[End of flash back]


That night, I’ve vowed that I will do everything, and anything in my power to take all her pain away, and make her happy again, even if that means hurting the person she’s madly in love with. The person who’s been making her cry herself to sleep every night. The person who’s slowly killing her…
Risa-san, you will be sorry.

To be continued…
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Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 5
Post by: kano-chan on November 18, 2010, 01:37:14 AM
Cool! TakaKame! :w00t: Eri cares so much for Ai-chan and even felt for her... :wub: They just met too. :roll:

Soo..Eri is pretty much madly in love with Ai-chan and it's going to break her heart when (if) TakaGaki comes together... :mon scare: Is there going to be a little TakaKame here? :mon misch: Since Ai-chan thought Eri was cute too! hehe...

And it doesn't seem that Gaki loves Ai-chan because if she did, she wouldn't feel comfortable making out with her boyfriend in front of Ai-chan! Is she just going for Ai-chan later because her boyfriend might be doing something behind her back? :panic:

hehe, sorry, I'm getting ideas... The best thing is to wait and see... :P2

Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 5
Post by: SarangAi on November 18, 2010, 03:39:02 AM
oohh TakaKame!  You dont' see too many of those  XD

Eri seems really taken by Aichan... i can't wait to see what she's gonna do to Risa and how aichan will respond  :twothumbs
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 5
Post by: kuro808 on November 18, 2010, 07:14:12 AM
hmm Eri is gonna be the one to face Risa but I wonder what Sayu is gonna do
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 4
Post by: oddball on November 18, 2010, 12:18:17 PM
Takahashi Ai. That’s her name. The girl that I’ve been thinking about ever since that day. She’s so beautiful, amazing, cute, hot, attractive, sexy, has a nice butt that I couldn’t stop starring at…okay ignore the last part. What? Don’t tell me that you wouldn’t do the same thing!

 :lol: nice afterthough about Ai's butt!

It was quite sweet and all how Eri has properly fallen for Ai, however I was worried about how Eri was going to make who ever made Ai upset (Gaki) regret what they have been doing to Ai, promosing that it will take Ai's pain away even if it means hurting Gaki!

The part at the end about 'Gaki you willl be sorry' was a bit fraky too  :panic:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 5
Post by: fallenxangel24952 on November 18, 2010, 04:36:26 PM
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She’s so beautiful, amazing, cute, hot, attractive, sexy, has a nice butt that I couldn’t stop starring at…okay ignore the last part.
how can we ignore THATs part :P

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“What a beautiful man scream…” I giggled to myself remembering what I had told her. What a beautiful man scream…and something about fuck being a bad word.
It's really one of the best! ....at least for a girl XD

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Takahashi Ai, don’t worry. I’ll erase all your pain. I’ll make you forget about the person who’s been hurting you so bad. I’ll make you smile again, just wait for me. You and I will be together forever, no matter what. You’ll be mine, and I’ll be yours.
somehow it sound like a psycho would say :shocked

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“Hey! Get away from her!” I said anger boiling inside of me. I’ve seen enough of this!
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I kicked him as hard as I could in his crotch. He fell to the ground screaming in pain.
I pushed him, witch made him fall to the ground next to his friend who was still holding his crotch area. I took that chance to grab the girl’s hand and run with her out of the bar
eri for the rescue :pimp:

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The person who’s slowly killing her…Risa-san, you will be sorry.
what yould eri do? :?

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p.s.:like ur fic more and more
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 5
Post by: XcuteX26262X on November 21, 2010, 04:26:44 PM
@kano-chan: Thanks for waiting.  :)

@SarangAi: Let's just say, Ai won't be happy...  :twisted:

@kurosawa87: You'll have to wait and see.  :)

@oddball: I'm glad you liked the part about Ai's butt.  XD

@fallenxangel24952: Thank you.  :heart:
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Chapter 6

Ai's POV

“Come on Ai-chan!!!” “No, leave me alone!!!” She’s been following me around ever since she decided to stay at my place for the night…Uninvited! What did she do this time? I just hope the police aren’t involved. Every time she gets in trouble, I’m the one to get blamed with her. “If I go down, you’re going down with me.” She told me that when she first lost her temper and hit that police officer in the face. Poor guy had a broken nose for 3 months. Guess what she said when they took her to the police station? “He’s was trying to touch my friend!” And guess who she meant by ‘my friend’? Yes, me! We spent that whole day in the police station being questioned about the insult Reina had committed. I love her, but sometimes she makes me want to get a restraining order against her.

“Are you going to tell me? Or am I going to have to force the words out of you?” she gave me one of her famous Yankee glares. That glare can burn holes through your body. Holes I tell you, holes!
I gulped as I ran to the nearest door which  happened to be the bathroom’s. “Come on dude! You can tell me anything. I’m not gonna judge you!” She stood behind the door whining. She’s actually cute when she does that. “Reina, please leave me alone.” I felt myself about to cry, why can’t people just mind their own business and leave me the alone?
“Fine.” I heard her mumbling something else and then walking away. I was relieved. Finally she won’t bother me again. I turned the door knob, but it wouldn’t open. I tried it again, this time it did open, but I landed on the floor with Reina on top of me. “OUTCH!” I tried opening my eyes, but my throbbing head didn’t help. “WHY DID YOU DO THAT FOR?” I was pissed! What a cheap move to pull. “You didn’t think I was gonna give up that easily, right?” She was right. But I’d rather die than admit it. “Would you please get off of me?” “Nope.” Hardheaded wonky eyed…I can’t curse her; I love too much to do that. Reina why did you have to be my best friend?

Every thing happened so fast that I didn’t even notice the weird position we were in. Reina was sitting on top of me with her legs around my waist, and her hands on my shoulders. My face started heating up, “please don’t see me. I don’t want you to see me like this.” She must’ve noticed, because she leaned in closer and started smirking. “Ai-chan, are you blushing?” “Blushing? Why would I be blushing?” I opened my mouth, but no words came out. “Someone please save me! Anyone, please!” as If god was listening to me, I heard the apartment’s door knob slowly turning and the door open. “Yes! Yes! Thank you god!” we both heard steps coming from the living room, as we waited to see who they belonged to. “Hey JunJu_” I froze. She was the last person I wanted to see. Of all people, why her? She looked at us in shock, tears started to build up beneath her eyes…Wait, what?

She wiped the tears away, and before I could say anything she ran. “R-Risa!” I pushed Reina off me and started running after her. She was about to slam the door behind her, but luckily I stopped her. “Risa?” she didn’t look at me, she was facing the door still crying. “Risa?” I called her name again, she wouldn’t turn to me. Seeing her like that made my heart ache.
I tried to put my arms around her and give her a hug, but she shook them off. “Don’t touch me!” she said between sobs. “What have I done to deserve all of this huh? Everyone I care about ends up breaking my heart. Why?” I was confused. I didn’t know what she was talking about. “You know? I caught Kei in bed with Sayu last night…” I felt like I got hit by a truck. “Risa, I’m sor_”  “I hate you!” My heart sank when I heard her saying those three words. “I hate you, I hate you, I hate you!” she faced me as she started to punch my arms, tears rolling from her face.  I didn’t know what to do, I wanted to stop her, but I couldn’t. Somehow I deserved it. Without warning she captured my lips with hers. My eyes widened and I could hear my heart beating fast. Her lips were soft …“What the hell is going on?” my brain wasn’t able to process what was happening, I tried to push her away but my whole body seemed frozen in place. She pushed me to the nearest wall, and started kissing me again, but this time with more passion. She left me up and before I knew it, my legs were wrapped around her waist and my hands around her neck as I kissed her back. She started caressing my thigh and as her tongue made its way into my mouth, I let out a soft moan. After realizing what I was doing, I pushed her as hard as I could. “WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?”

To be continued…
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Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 6
Post by: kano-chan on November 22, 2010, 12:10:36 AM
Whoa! What happened? :shocked

The most unexpected thing in the chapter to me was...that SAYU SLEPT WITH KEI! :stunned: :on spit: whawhaa~t?

Is this flashback or present? (sorry, might have been a liiittle bit confused there) Cuz' if Gaki found Kei sleeping with Sayu, then why did she choose him over Ai-chan? And if that was the past, why did she find him sleeping with Sayu? Shouldn't they be broken apart already? (am I missing something? sorry, maybe it's my mistake..) :huhuh

And whoo! Some TakaGaki action!---> :mon kissy: So Gaki was in love with Ai-chan that's why she got all hurt and everything. :mon determined:

I like how the chapter went! :twothumbs




Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 6
Post by: kuro808 on November 22, 2010, 02:16:02 AM
I guess Sayu is going to be the wrench but I guess the ReinAi moment didn't help the situation, oh well working toward climax  :nervous
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 5
Post by: fallenxangel24952 on November 22, 2010, 06:13:14 AM
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Reina was sitting on top of me with her legs around my waist, and her hands on my shoulders. My face started heating up, “please don’t see me. I don’t want you to see me like this.” She must’ve noticed, because she leaned in closer and started smirking. “Ai-chan, are you blushing?” “Blushing? Why would I be blushing?” I opened my mouth, but no words came out.
A little ReinAi moment :wub:

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“Hey JunJu_” I froze. She was the last person I wanted to see. Of all people, why her? She looked at us in shock, tears started to build up beneath her eyes…Wait, what?
Could it be...

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She wiped the tears away, and before I could say anything she ran. “R-Risa!” I pushed Reina off me and started running after her. She was about to slam the door behind her, but luckily I stopped her. “Risa?” she didn’t look at me, she was facing the door still crying. “Risa?” I called her name again, she wouldn’t turn to me. Seeing her like that made my heart ache.
...yeah it is. And sh*t at the timing :cry:


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“You know? I caught Kei in bed with Sayu last night…”
:shocked :shocked :shocked :shocked :shocked :shocked


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I felt like I got hit by a truck. “Risa, I’m sor_”  “I hate you!” My heart sank when I heard her saying those three words. “I hate you, I hate you, I hate you!” she faced me as she started to punch my arms, tears rolling from her face.

ouch! that hurts :cry:


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Without warning she captured my lips with hers. My eyes widened and I could hear my heart beating fast. Her lips were soft …“What the hell is going on?” my brain wasn’t able to process what was happening, I tried to push her away but my whole body seemed frozen in place. She pushed me to the nearest wall, and started kissing me again, but this time with more passion. She left me up and before I knew it, my legs were wrapped around her waist and my hands around her neck as I kissed her back. She started caressing my thigh and as her tongue made its way into my mouth, I let out a soft moan.
TakaGaki :wub: :inlove: :wub: :inlove:

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After realizing what I was doing, I pushed her as hard as I could. “WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?”
yeah after a hot/passion kiss :P

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nice can't wait for the nxt chap :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 6
Post by: oddball on November 22, 2010, 05:08:04 PM
Man, so Kei cheated on Gaki with Sayu!!!

I duuno though, Gaki and Ai getting on was all  :drool: and stuff but was it because Gaki was upset about Kei and is making out with Ai because of Kei rather than the fact that she loves Ai? is this when they get in a relationship, not based on their love but because of a break-up, if that is the cse it can only mean bad times ahead.....

Reina seems a very, um, touchy friend dosn't she?
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 6
Post by: XcuteX26262X on November 29, 2010, 06:26:02 PM
I'M BACK~ Sorry guys, I haven't been able to update because I was busy with school and stuff. Please don't be mad at me :mon pray2:

@kano-chan: It's still in the past.  :)

@kurosawa87: Yep, the ReinAi moment didn't help...  :twisted:

@fallenxangel24952: Thanks.  :)

@oddball: Yes, she does...

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Chapter 7

Reina’s POV

“Okay…that was awkward.” I said to myself as I walked back to my apartment. Today was not my day. First; my mom has called to tell me that she’s on her way to Tokyo. Now she calls? Huh! I wonder what she wants from me this time. Second; the person that I’ve been avoiding for the longest time is in town. Third; I found out that Sayu slept with Gaki-san’s boyfriend. By the way, she and I are going to have a little chat... And fourth; I’ve witnessed my two friends making out. My two GIRL friends making out! I mean, I have no problem with girls love, but that’s something that I’m not into. Oh well, to each their own.

Risa’s POV

“WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?”
What was I thinking? Why did I kiss her? Oh my god! Now, I’m starting to freak out! Calm down Risa, calm down. Just tell her that you were upset and you weren’t thinking and it just happened.
“Answer me!” answer you? But I don’t know how, that’s why when I opened my mouth no words came out. “Risa, why…Why…Why did you kiss me?” what have I gotten myself into? “Ai…I’m so-sorry…” that’s all I was able to say. “Why did you kiss me Gaki-san?” my gaze my focused on the floor, I couldn’t look at her, I was too embarrassed, I was too ashamed. I’ve made a bold move, and now I have to think of an excuse of why I did it. I saw her shadow getting closer as she lifted my head and looked into my eyes. “Risa, tell me the truth, I have to know…No, I need to know.” The truth? I have yet to figure it out.

I have to get out of here, I can’t do this. I’m sorry, but I have to go. My legs were moving on their own, and as I was about to open the door, two hands pinned me against the wall. “You think you can just come here, kiss me and then run away?!” she said, eyes brimming with tears, and a voice filled with sadness and anger.

“What is wrong with you?” No answer. “Why are you doing this to me?” No answer. “Why did you kiss me?” No answer. I saw her raising her hand, and as I was preparing myself for the slap… nothing happened. She didn’t slap me. Next thing I know, she was on the floor sobbing and begging me to answer her questions as I watched her.

“Please tell me! Please tell me! I need to know! Please!” I just stood there, my body was frozen. I wanted to kneel down and give her a hug, I wanted to stop her cries but I couldn’t. Then, I did the most unexpected thing…I walked out on her, and left her there crying her soul out. I don’t know what’s gotten into me. I know I’m going to regret this for the rest of my life. I know she hates me now and I know that she’s probably never want to see me again, and I deserve it, I deserve every single thing that’s going to happen. I’ve made a huge mistake, and now I have to deal with the consequence. I’m a monster, and I deserve everything bad that’s coming my way.

To be continued…

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It's shorter than my previous chapters. :mon sweat: I'm sorry, but I promise the next chap is going to be longer.
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 7
Post by: SarangAi on November 29, 2010, 07:51:54 PM
OMGGGGG don't cry Aichan!!!!!  :pleeease:

First, I just thought Aichan was angry.  But then, she just broke down...
I guess the question of whether Risa liked her or not was gnawing at her soul deep inside :fever:

but Gakisan shouldn't have walked out; that's a big no-no!  :angry1: :on thumbb:

hopefully, she'll come back and be accept aichan back~  :prayers: :hee:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 7
Post by: kuro808 on November 29, 2010, 11:07:05 PM
Risa seems to be regretful but I guess with the cheating boyfriend, she has to do something with AI, unfortunately I hate Risa for leaving her and I hope she could explain
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 7
Post by: kano-chan on November 30, 2010, 12:34:21 AM
Oh no! She walked out on Ai-chan! :mon ref: Don't cry, oh, poor Ai-chan! :cry:

Well, I can't blame Ai-chan for being so harsh with Gaki... cuz' that was pretty messed up. :mon unsure:

It does sound like Gaki didn't really love Ai-chan back then.. :mon huh2:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 7
Post by: oddball on November 30, 2010, 12:18:14 PM
Poor Reina, seems as though she is totally confused over the whole situation, plus her mother is coming to town  :panic:

Wow Gaki kinda got all mixed up in the head didn't she, she just kissed Ai and then she could not answer Ai's question of why she kissed her and then, when Ai asked why she did it, collapsing to the floor in tears, she just left?!?  :angry:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 7
Post by: kRisZ on November 30, 2010, 01:50:14 PM
Chapter 1


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"Ai-chan, I’m going to kill myself if you don't open this door right now!
:scared: who's that Risa?  :shocked

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"Fine, kill yourself! See If I care."
Not a good dare  :mon scare:

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And then, there was silence...Wait, she didn't kill herself...Did she?
lol

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"What do you want me to say? That everything is going to be okay?"
What did she do?   :O

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"Ai-chan, I made a huge mistake."
What kind?  :huhuh

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"Why are you here at the first place? Aren't you supposed to be with him… in your honeymoon?"
In a WHAT?!  :OMG:  :OMG:  :OMG:

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“I left him because I couldn't live with him for the rest of my life...Ai-chan, I'm still in love with you...I’ve made the biggest mistake of my life by leaving you..."
Holy cow!? You left Ai for a guy?!  :frustrated:  (sorry boys lol)

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“I hope you die and rot in hell!"
OMG  :grin:

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“Fuck you, you whore, I don't want you back...”
Ouches



Chapter 2


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She told me that she likes girls, but if that’s true, then why was she sleeping with a guy?
Totally not cool

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“Awesome! There is this new movie about two people falling in love, and then getting married.” Wow! The story is so not predictable…Ai thought raising a brow.
:lol:

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“It’s a romantic movie.” Really? I thought it was horror… “I love romantic movies!” I hate those mushy movies…
:lol:



Chapter 3


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I smiled, and as I was walking up to her, that smile was replaced with frown when I saw him, placing his arms around her waist and giving her a kiss on the back of her head.
:grr:

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“Hi!” “Oh hi, babe.” She gave him a quick peck on the lips then turned to me.
Can I torture and kill him after?

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But where can I possibly get one? … Where is Reina when you need her?
Eh?

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After probably twenty seconds of making out
Jezzzzzz

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hey looked very embarrassed after their make out session.
Oh, they can feel that emotion?

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Risa was looking at the ground with her face burning red, and that bastard was…smirking?
That guy is annoying

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I'm borrowing Reina’s shotgun!
Oh I see XD

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“My name is Eri, and I saved you.”
Eririn!  :cow:

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“Yeah, right! You asked them if they had condoms…”
:mon freeze:

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She could have at least let me pretend it was a dream. Dammit.
XD



Chapter 4


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felt myself blushing like crazy, but thank god for the turned off lights in my apartment.
They're in a dark room?!  :OMG: What were they doing?!  :fainted:

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Someone has slapped me…
That bastard slapped Risa  :angry:

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“Sayu, I’m fine. Really, it was just a dream!”
Oh it's Sayu  :D

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I’d rather chew on broken glass than shopping
lol

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I feel like he’s hiding something from me.
He's got another woman



Chapter 5


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That’s a promise, and when I make a promise, I don’t break it.
Scary  :O

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Aichan  :cry:
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The girl and I cried in each other’s arms. Her tears of sorrow, and my tears of sadness.
That's sad  :(

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Risa-san, you will be sorry.
:dizzy:



Chapter 6


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“Come on Ai-chan!!!” “No, leave me alone!!!” She’s been following me around ever since she decided to stay at my place for the night…Uninvited!
Risa?  :w00t:

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I love her, but sometimes she makes me want to get a restraining order against her.
:lol:

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Reina why did you have to be my best friend?
Yay! No RenAi lovey dovey!  :cow: lol

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She was the last person I wanted to see. Of all people, why her? She looked at us in shock, tears started to build up beneath her eyes…Wait, what?
Risa!

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“You know? I caught Kei in bed with Sayu last night…”
EEEEEEEEEHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH?????????????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!???????????????

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Without warning she captured my lips with hers.
Whoa!  :mon money:

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he pushed me to the nearest wall, and started kissing me again, but this time with more passion. She left me up and before I knew it, my legs were wrapped around her waist and my hands around her neck as I kissed her back. She started caressing my thigh and as her tongue made its way into my mouth, I let out a soft moan.
:drool:

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“WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?”
:roll: Killjoy  :roll:



Chapter 7


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Second; the person that I’ve been avoiding for the longest time is in town.
Who? Eri?

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hen, I did the most unexpected thing…I walked out on her, and left her there crying her soul out.
Awww, not so cool

Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 7
Post by: fallenxangel24952 on November 30, 2010, 03:56:09 PM
Nooooo~ :OMG: :frustrated: :on blackhole: :mon wtf:
risa you just made one of the biggest mistake ever on your life! :scolding: :temper:
poor aichan :mon emo:
but in risa pov
risa would be worse...since if ur boyfriend is cheating you with your friend sayu...is quite hard :mon wind:

p.s.:I had read the fics with my cell phone during the lesson....then at the end I screamed quite loud "why risa why!!!" xD :scared:
The consequences: all look at me weirdly and maybe thought "who risa is" LOL :mon lol:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 7
Post by: XcuteX26262X on December 02, 2010, 09:51:55 PM
@SarangAi: Hopefully...but that's going to be hard since Ai-chan hates her.

@kurosawa87: I hope so too.

@kano-chan: yes, she didn't love her. Or did she? hmmm...  :twisted:

@oddball: Yeah! what the hell was she thinking?  :angry:

@kRisZ: Yay! A new reader! Thanks for reading.  :)

@fallenxangel24952: Your reply cracked me up.  :rofl:
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Chapter 8


Cold blood trickling from her wrist as she sat in the tub. Everything was quiet, all she could hear was the sound of blood drops…Her blood drops.  She made a promise that she would stop cutting and hurting herself, but she figured Screw it! I’m already dead. As the blood kept dripping, the water got from no color to light red and finally, it turned dark red. She was sitting in a pool filled with her own blood.

How long is it going to take? When am I going to die? She was in so much pain, but it was nothing compared to the pain her heart was causing. She fell in love with someone who’s never going to feel the same way. She fell in love with someone who’s so heartless, so blind and careless. She fell in love with someone who left her on the floor begging and crying her heart, her soul out. She fell in love…with a monster.

Love, what is love? Everyone says love is a beautiful thing, but from what she went through, it’s anything but beautiful. It’s harsh, cruel, painful, sad and suffering. It makes you feel pathetic, it makes you want to disappear from this world and never return, not because you’re ashamed to admit and tell everyone that you have fallen in ‘love’ with the same gender, but because staying in this messed up world that’s full of monsters makes you want to kill yourself, just like what she’s doing right now. She’s waiting for her sad, lonely ending.

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A girl was walking down the streets humming a song that stuck in her head. She has just finished her part time job. Five more months and I’ll be able to pay for the rest of my college costs. Her life wasn’t necessarily the best, it was rather hard, but she had to keep on living. She has always wanted to become a doctor, because she wants to help people and save their lives.
She was working in a bar as a waitress, she didn’t like it, but the owner/ manager pays her a decent amount of money. I feel sorry for him; he gives me extra money, because he thinks I like him. Oh well, as long as I tell him that he has a chance with me, I guess it's fine. And plus, he’s not that bad looking, he’s actually very handsome…too bad, I don’t like men.

She was talking to herself while walking, she quite enjoyed talking to herself, but she won’t tell that to anyone, because they’ll end up thinking she’s crazy. Even if they did, it’s not like she minds it, she doesn’t care about what people say or think about her. She never was one of those kids who pretend to be someone else just so others like them. She also never had friends, because she enjoys her own company, she is her own best friend.

As she continued walking, she heard faint sounds, they were far, but she still heard them. It sounded like someone was calling for help. As she got closer, she could clearly hear “Help! Someone help me! She’s not moving! Please someone!” without hesitation she ran as fast as she could, not caring for the people she pumped into “Move!” she pushed and shoved until she was standing in front of the scene.

Her eyes widened as she saw a girl with two wavy ponytails holding another girl who was soaked with what looked like…blood. “Thank god, help me! She’s…she’s dying…please…” the girl with ponytails begged as the waitress just started in shock. After realizing what was happening, she quickly flipped her phone open and called the hospital “We need an ambulance! A girl is dying! Please hurry!”

“Ai-chan, please hold on! Don’t give up on me! Please, you can’t do this to me!”
Ai-chan?! As if she wasn’t shocked enough. She looked again at the girl with the bloody clothes, and then it hit her…hard! ‘Ai’ is a pretty common name in Japan, but this girl wasn’t just another ‘Ai’. This was the ‘Ai’. The girl that the waitress fell in love with, Takahashi Ai. I must be dreaming. This is not happening…

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“Tanaka Reina? Kamei Eri?” the two girls stood up when they saw the doctor. “Doctor, how is she? She’s not going to…Die…” After saying that last word, her tears were falling once again. “Tanaka- san. Takahashi-san is going to be fine. Although she had lost a lot of blood, and I’m quite surprised that she’s still alive, but she is, and that’s what matters.” The wonky eyed girl stopped crying and looked at Eri then the doctor, and then suddenly she started crying again, but this time, she was crying tears of happiness. “Thank you so much!” She was so happy that her best friend is not gone. She's going to be able to see her again. “You’re welcome, but I think you should be thanking Kamei-san not me.” Reina looked confused. Why would I thank her for? “You see, Kamei-san is the one who donated her blood for Takahashi-san. She saved her.” Her confused stare turned from the doctor to the girl standing next to her. Reina was too busy crying, she didn’t even notice the gauze on the girl’s arm. “Thank you.” She gave the girl a tight hug and then smiled. They both turned their attention to the doctor. “So doctor, can we see her?” he looked at the papers in his hands and then answered “I’m afraid you can’t. She needs to rest, but you can visit her in the morning.” Reina and Eri looked disappointment, but they didn’t say anything. “I have to go now, duty calls.” With that the doctor disappeared.
“My name is Tanaka Reina, nice to meet you.” Reina extended her hand to the girl. “Kamei Eri, likewise.”
Kamei- san, thank you so much for saving Ai-chan’s life.

To be continued...

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Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 8
Post by: rndmnwierd on December 02, 2010, 10:36:26 PM
What? Was Ai the one bleeding out at the start? I guess Reina found her, then. You know, I actually think the most surprising part in this was that Eri wanted to be a doctor. XD
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 8
Post by: kuro808 on December 02, 2010, 10:55:50 PM
Wow, I guess Ai feels really shitty, but thanks to Reina Eri, she seems okay but yeah the thought of Eri becoming a doctor seems quite intriguing
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 8
Post by: SarangAi on December 03, 2010, 12:23:29 AM
WHAT.  OMG that was INTENSE reaction from Aichan O___O

must've really felt pained.... gah, you're making me cry! :cry:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 8
Post by: kano-chan on December 03, 2010, 02:04:33 AM
Ai-chan! Don't be silly! :cry: Everything will be alright......right? :mon scare: Wow...Kame saved her! :w00t: Gaki hurt Ai-chan so much to the point that Ai-chan had to kill herself. :( Does that mean Ai-chan might return Eri's feelings? :roll: Dang...This is really somethin'! :panic:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 8
Post by: Shiawase_Honoo on December 03, 2010, 08:33:10 AM
I wondered that Eri's blood can give to Ai-chan, am I wrong? :dunno:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 8
Post by: oddball on December 03, 2010, 05:33:41 PM
I'm still standing by my earlier convictions that Ai isn't quite right in the head, her attempting to commit sucide is just another peice of the puzzle that is an Ai-chan that is not totally menatally stable....

So it was Eri that gave bllod to Ai? It seems at least that Reina was very greatful to her, as for Ai-Chan? well perhaps we will wait and see.....

hmm as a side thought Tana/Kame anyone?.....
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 8
Post by: lil_hamz on December 05, 2010, 03:50:19 AM
I lol-ed at the part where Eri said she didn't like men XD I'm sorry but somehow...it was funny ^^;

Sayu slept with Gaki's bf? Wow! And I'll help you answer why you forced yourself on Ai like that Risa. The reason is simple, cuz Ai is one hawt girl XD

So It's gonna be a triangle between Eri, Reina and Ai with leader caught in the middle? Where is that gonna leave Risa? Oh and don't tell me Sayu would end up with Kei for good @@

One last point, Eri can't donate blood to Ai cuz she's AB+ while Ai is A+. If anything, everyone else should be able to donate to Eri. Okay, I'll shut up now cuz this is totally irrelevant to your awesome fic XD I guess I found another fic to chase :)

Thanks for writing this. I love the angst.
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 8
Post by: XcuteX26262X on December 13, 2010, 09:14:35 AM
Thanks for the awesome replies :heart:
I hope you enjoy this sucky chapter. I know it's not good, but please be nice :nervous
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Chapter 9


She woke up to find herself lying in a hospital bed. She was confused and somewhat scared. How did I get here? Why am I here? She looked right, left, up and then down. She noticed gauze wrapped with a medical tape around her left wrist. I had tried to kill myself again, but this time, I went a bit too far… she stared at the blood stained fabric on her wrist and started crying.

{Flash back}
“Ai-chan, please hold on! Don’t give up on me! Please, you can’t do this to me!”
{End of flash back}


She tried to stop the tears, but they kept falling. Stop it you crybaby! You did this to yourself. Why are you crying? She scolded herself, but that only made it worse.

Why am I doing this? What did Reina do to deserve this? I made her cry…Reina doesn’t cry! She didn’t cry when her mom kicked her out of the house, and she didn’t cry when she lost her boyfriend in a car accident…but she cried for me, for my life.

Ai cried until there were no more tears left. “Reina, you will cry no more. I promise.” She made up her mind; she’s not going to let anyone hurt her again, she’s not going to let anyone play with her feelings again, especially that person who was the cause of all her pain. Goodbye, Risa…

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Reina’s POV

“There is no way in hell I’m going to let her get away with this!” I said quietly while biting my bottom lip. She must’ve heard because she stopped and looked at me. “Tanaka-san, are you okay?” I gave her my awesome model-like smile and replied. “Yeah, I’m okay.” She smiled, and then her smile turned into a worried expression. “Oh my god! Tanaka-san, you’re bleeding!” I must’ve bitten too hard. I was trying to wipe the blood away, but suddenly, I felt two hands cupping my face, that’s when I completely froze. “How are you okay? Your lip is bleeding. Here let me…” she leaned closer and wiped the blood with her finger. “Why were you biting your lip?” she said calmly. Why is she calm? She’ way too freaking close! My cheeks were burning; my whole body was feeling hot. What is wrong with you? Why are you feeling like this? This is not the first time a girl gets way too close to you? You’re always like this with Ai-chan? But, this is…different. What are you thinking!? Reian, you baka! “Tanaka-san? Tanaka-san? Hello?”
The scolding in my mind was interrupted when I saw her waving her hand in front of my face. “Huh? Sorry.” God, I’m such an idiot! No wonder Ai-chan is my only friend. No one wants to be friends with someone like me.

Kamei-san offered to walk me home, and I happily accepted. As we were walking, we saw two figures standing under a street light. We couldn’t really see what they we’re doing because of the distance, but when Kamei-san and I got closer, we could clearly see what was happening…fucking PDA. I had a disgusted look on my face, while Kamei-san hung her head low. I think she was embarrassed, because I could see a tint of light pink on her cheeks. So cute~! Wait-what? I shook off the strange feeling that swept through me, and focused on the couple. I had an awesome idea. “Ano, Kamei-san?” she lifted up her head and looked at me. “What, Tanaka-san?”  I have to admit, she kind of looked cute doing that…oh my god! Stop it, you baka!
“How about we surprise them?” I told Kamei-san my idea, and she seemed to like it, because she agreed quickly without hesitation. This is going to be so much fun.
We walked from behind them and “BOO!” they both jumped at the same time, and then looked at us. “What the hell is wrong with you?” “Stop sucking face in public! It’s disgusting! Get a freaking room, will ya?” they both gasped in shock and then the girlfriend quickly grabbed her boyfriend’s arm and walked away. “Don’t forget, always use protection!” I shouted as they disappeared.

I felt so proud of myself, and as I was praising my awesomeness, I heard Kamei-san giggling. She looked at me and said: “That was so fun. Did you see the look on their faces? It was priceless.” I couldn’t help but grin from ear to ear. Kamei-san, I want to get to know you better.

She walked me home as promised, and you couldn’t imagine the awkwardness.
“Mom?” What the hell is she doing here? I thought she said that she didn’t want to see me again. But what is she doing here staring outside my apartment?

“Reina!” she hugged me, but I didn’t hug her back. Why would I? “God, you have no idea how much I’ve missed you.” She started stroking my hair. “Oh! Who’s your friend?” I guess she noticed Kamei-san standing behind me. “Hello, my name is Ka-““Her name doesn’t matter! What are you doing here? Why are you here?” I glared at my mother. “Aren’t you happy to see me?” “No, I’m not!” I shot back. I was so mad, I wanted to slap her across the face, but I couldn’t bring myself to do it. She’s still my mother whether I like it or not.

After staying silent for some time, she finally spoke. “Reina-chan, I’m sorry…” she started crying.
Great, yeah just great! She likes making me look like the bad guy! I’m the victim here, not her! I was sick of it, of her, of everything. I had to get away from her. Seeing her made me sick to my stomach. “Come with me.” I grabbed Kamei-san’s hand and started walking. “Reina!” I heard my mother calling, but I didn’t want to see her. I hate her. “Tanaka-san! Stop it!” Kamei-san tried to release herself from my grasp, but failed. “What are you doing? Stop it!”
She was getting on my nerves. Why wouldn’t she just shut the hell up! I stopped and pushed her. She flinched as her back and head made contact with the concrete wall. “You’re irritating me, and I’m getting fed up with you.” I said with a cold voice. As I was walking closer, she started whimpering. “Tanaka-san, you're scaring me…”

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Eri’s POV

“Tanaka-san, you’re scaring me…” tears started to build up under my eyes as I watched getting closer, and closer. I closed my eyes preparing myself for whatever was going to happen. I waited, and waited, but…nothing happened. I slowly opened my eyes and saw tears rolling down her cheeks.
Tanaka-san…

               
To be continued...
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 9
Post by: kuro808 on December 13, 2010, 10:09:47 AM
Hmm Reina seems to care about Ai but somehow Eri comes in as the buffer between everybody... I wonder how Risa will save what ever is left....
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 9
Post by: oddball on December 13, 2010, 04:38:05 PM
Hmm, seems as though Reina has allways had a litttle something for Ai but perhaps Eri is the new object of her affections, not like she is with Ai but actually proper love, I wonder how Reina will react when she finds out Eri loves Ai???
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 9
Post by: kano-chan on December 14, 2010, 10:30:06 AM
Dang...Ai-chan.. She totally hates Risa now.. What possible way is there to get TakaGaki together? :panic:

Oh my gosh! LOLOL! "Stop sucking face in public!" and the, "...always use protection!" was so  :lol: TanaKamei really getting along there! :heart:

Reina's mother is messed up.. :smhid And poor Reina! She's crying again! :O What will Kame do now..? :roll:

haha...The chapter doesn't suck.
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 9
Post by: XcuteX26262X on December 15, 2010, 06:18:15 AM
@kurosawa87: I'm wondering the same thing...

@oddball: You'll have to wait and see... :twisted:

@kano-chan: Don't worry, Ai and Risa will end up together...Maybe. :twisted: Yeah, what will Kame do now? hmmmm 
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 9
Post by: Swtme03 on December 15, 2010, 06:38:44 AM
What in the world is going on here?!!  :shocked
I am totally sucked in to this story!
All the ties, all the passion, all the crying, all the pain....
I LOVE IT!!!   :bow:
I shall follow from now on :thumbsup
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 9
Post by: XcuteX26262X on December 15, 2010, 07:13:27 AM
@Swtme03: Yay!!! :otomerika:
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Chapter 10

Her phone rang, but she wasn’t in the mood for talking to anyone, she was pissed, very pissed, confused, heartbroken and drunk.
Her phone vibrated, she looked at it, it was a text message from that guy, the guy she loved. The guy that slept with her best friend, correction, former best friend.

Baby, why aren’t you answering your phone?
Everyone is worried, Sayu and I are worried, you haven’t showed up to work today.
Is everything alright? Should I come to your place and check up
On you?
Please reply as soon as you get this message.
- Hitoshi Kei
(a made up name.)
   
“You and Sayu are worried about me? Hah! If that’s true then I’m the queen of Jordan.” Risa said after gulping down another glass of alcohol.
The bar tender was getting worried because she was drinking too much. “Excuse me Niigaki-san, I know this is none of my business, but I think that’s enough for tonight.” Risa glared at him “If you know that it’s none if your business, then shut the hell up!” After realizing what she had said, she immediately apologized. “Gomenasai.”  “I’m sorry, it’s just that….” then tears were running down her face, “Does he know how much it hurts?” “Does Ai-chan know that I didn’t mean to make her cry?” she didn’t bother to wipe the tears “Does she know that I might have feelings for her?”

THUD

“Call an ambulance!”

[In the hospital]

“Doctor, Are you sure that she will be fine?” Sayu asked the doctor while crying her eyes out. Isn’t it ironic? How she’s worried. She’s been going out with Kei for the past month without caring about how her ‘best friend’ will feel if she finds out, and now, here she is in the hospital, in the middle of the night, messy hair, no makeup, no stupid ‘kawaii’ smile and swollen eyes from crying.
“Niigaki-san consumed too much alcohol, and that’s not good, but she’ll be fine.” He finally said before a nurse called him. “Don’t worry, she’s strong.”

Sayu was walking to Risa’s room, she reached the door, but before she could open it, she stopped, “It’s all my fault. How can I see her after all the things I’ve done? I’m the one who caused this…” Everything went silent, except for the ticking clock in the background. “Gaki-san…I-”

“Excuse me!” a nurse called, “Are you Michishige Sayumi?” Sayu turned around and saw a nurse standing inches away from her. “Y-y-yes?” She hesitantly replied.

“I’m sorry, but Niigaki Risa-san told us that she doesn’t want to see you.”

“Huh?!” Sayu looked at the nurse with a surprised look on her face. “But, I’m her best friend!”

“I’m sorry…but you have to leave.”

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“What do you want Sayu-chan? I’m busy here.” Kei said obviously irritated by the bunny’s sudden visit to his work place. “We need to talk.” She said firmly. “And I told you I’m busy, or are you just deaf?” Risa, what is so special about this jerk? “Risa has been taken to the hospital.” Miss usa-chan peace waited for a response, but she didn’t get the one she wanted. “And…?” I can’t believe this asshole! “What? Don’t look at me like that. You’re scaring me.” Kei said with a mocking voice, and then he smirked. “I’m not sure if you’re aware of this, but I don’t care about either you or that slut Risa.” How dare he? “Usa-chan, are you going to cry? Your eyes are getting red.” Sayu didn’t say anything; she just stood face to face with him trying so hard not do anything stupid that will get her into trouble.
She gathered up all her courage and spoke. “So, that night…didn’t mean anything to you?” her voice cracked at the last word. “No.”

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Eri’s POV

That night she told me everything. She told me why Takahashi-san tried to kill herself several times, and who was responsible for her suicide attempts…Niigaki Risa.

I made a promise that I will make whoever was hurting Takahashi-san sorry, but after what Tanaka-san had told me, I can’t. Takahashi-san is in love with Niigaki-san, I’m afraid if I did anything to her, Takahashi-san will jump off a building, and I don’t want that to happen. She’s not in a stable state right now.

So after thinking for a long time, I’ve decided that I will let go of Takahashi-san. I know it’s not going to be easy, but I have to. I love her, but she doesn’t love me, and she never will. At least no as much as she loves her. It’s always going to be ‘Risa’. There is no place for ‘Eri’ in her heart. How can she love me, when she doesn’t even know me?

The hardest thing to do is to watch the one you love, love someone else.
Goodbye Takahashi-san. In my dreams you're mine forever...

To be continued...
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 10
Post by: kuro808 on December 15, 2010, 07:42:38 AM
Eri seems torn either between Ai and her heart, I wonder if Eri will approach Risa...
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 10
Post by: kano-chan on December 15, 2010, 09:14:23 AM
Risa! What do you see in that JERK?! :mon fierce: So Sayu actually cares and isn't completely cold-hearted. Now she knows the real Kei. Gah! He slept with Sayu just for his own desires! :angry:

I didn't expect Kame to give up on Ai-chan so easily, but this gives Reina a much better chance to be with her. :wub:

It's more like, let's see how Sayu will approach Risa after this. :roll:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 10
Post by: oddball on December 15, 2010, 11:30:50 AM
so Gaki is upset because of Sayu and Kei cheating, or is it perhaps more to do with the fact that she made Ai cry and realizing that she may have feelings for Ai and beliving that Ai now hates her?......

Judging by the conversation between the nurse and Sayu it seems as though Risa, even if she is more upset about Ai, has still not forgivern Sayu!

Goodbye Takahashi-san. In my dreams you're mine forever...

Poor Eri, I hope she dosnt do anything stupid for Ai and Gaki's sake, perhaps she will realise that the girl who told her about Ai and Gaki has feeling for her?
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 10
Post by: XcuteX26262X on December 24, 2010, 10:21:25 PM
Chapter 11

A pale girl with jet-black hair walked through the streets of Tokyo in the middle of the night, she looked like a mess, which caused everyone to give her strange looks, but she could care less. All she wanted was to drink her self to sleep; hopefully when she wakes the next day, she won’t remember a thing.

{Flash back.}

“So, that night…didn’t mean anything to you?” her voice cracked at the last word. “No.”
The tears the bunny’s been holding were now falling. “Look, usa-chan. I’m a man. Men need sex. It doesn’t matter where they’re getting it from, as long as they get it.”
His words struck through her so deeply, she had to get out before collapsing in front of him. The last thing she wanted was for him to make any physical contact with her. That is if he was human enough to help her up if she fell.
 
{End of flash back}

“That bipolar son of a bitch!” The bunny said while closing her hand into a tight fist.
She walked until she spotted a familiar bar. “Where did I see this place before?” after a while of starting, she finally remembered. “Risa and I got drunk for the first time in there…” a tear escaped her eye and rolled down her cheek at the mention of her unfortunately former best friend.

“Well I guess it’s time to get wasted.” She finally said before stepping into the bar.
“Michishige -san?” the bar tender asked amazed. “Oh my god, it’s you! Long time no see.”
When he saw that she didn’t recognize him, he laughed. “You don’t remember me, do you?” the bunny could only smile shyly. “It’s me, Hitomi Mike. We went to the same high school…” She titled her head to the side, and then it hit her. “Holy crap! You’re Hitomi Mike. The hafu!” “Yep, that’s me. The hafu…” he said with a fake frown. “I’m sorry, I didn’t mean it like that.” She hung her head low in embarrassment. “Haha, I was just kidding. It’s nice to see you.” She lifted her head slowly. She was glad that for once her boldness didn’t hurt someone’s feelings. “So, what can I get you?” Sayumi thought for a moment and then answered. “I want…hmmm…something strong that will help me forget about certain stuff.” Mike laughed and then started preparing her drink. “Here you go; this is ‘The black devil’.” ‘The black devil’ huh? Who the hell came up with the lame name?

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“Michishige -san, what are you doing? Please stop it!” Mike tried to stop the drunken bunny from doing anything that she’ll regret. Apparently she drank too much, and now she wants to have some fun.

“Come on~! Just let me kiss you~!” the bunny said as she tried to pull his pants down.
“Mishige-san, I think you want to do more than just kissing. Just stop!”

The bunny suddenly stopped and looked at him. “Am I not attractive enough for you?”

“That’s not it. Oh, come on don’t cry. It’s just that…you’re drunk and I don’t want you to do something stupid… Michishige-san, wait!”

“Just leave me alone!”

A waitress approached the bar tender slowly. “Ano, Mike-kun, is everything alright?”

“No…” Mike said while biting his nails. “Lin, could you do me a favor and follow that girl and make sure she’s alright?”

“And why would I do that?” LinLin said raising a brow.

“Because, I told you.”

They both glared at each other, but then Mike grinned. “If you do that, I’ll give you my Vampire Knight collection…”

“Deal.”

With that, LinLin ran out of the bar and started searching for a girl with pale skin, and long black hair.
“Why did I agree? It’s freaking cold!” The panda complained as she rubbed her arms and legs. “But I really want those DVDs and posters…”

Meanwhile, Risa sat on her couch ready to pop some pills and then sleep. She hasn’t been able to sleep, because every time she closes her eyes memories of certain someone forms into her head.

“Might as well watch some TV.” She grabbed the remote and started flickering through channels until something caught her eyes.

“We apologize for interrupting regular broadcasting to bring you this MMN breaking news report.”

Risa dropped the remote as her eyes winded in shock.   

To be continued...
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 11
Post by: kuro808 on December 24, 2010, 11:44:03 PM
Michishige going that far with a high school classmate and somehow with everything on her mind, drunken bunny will probably do something stupid luckily for the bartender he found a way out, however I wonder how Risa will see the news
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 11
Post by: kano-chan on December 25, 2010, 01:46:29 AM
So are the memories of a certain person = Ai-chan or Kei bastard? :? More like Ai-chan.

Oh no....Did something just happened to Sayu?? :O Maybe they can make up. :roll:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 11
Post by: fallenxangel24952 on December 25, 2010, 07:13:23 PM
wow a drunken sayu is dangerous :shocked it is a good thing that the bartender is nice :twothumbs

Quote
“We apologize for interrupting regular broadcasting to bring you this MMN breaking news report.”

Risa dropped the remote as her eyes winded in shock.
have a very bad feeling :(
maybe about sayu or aichan? :?

and Merry Christmas!!! :cow: :cow: :cow:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 11
Post by: oddball on December 26, 2010, 12:57:57 PM
So Ai is taking this badly, Gaki is taking it badly and now Sayu is taking it badly aswell!  :cry: Man all these girls have had tough times havent they....

A news report, I wonder what it was that made Gaki so shocked?!?
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 11
Post by: XcuteX26262X on December 31, 2010, 06:44:36 PM
@kurosawa87: You'll have to wait and see. Thanks for reading :)

@kano-chan: Oh trust me, they'll do more than just making up... 

@fallenxangel24952: It's about Sayu.

@oddball: Let's just say that Sayu is about to do something very VERY stupid. Can Risa stop her? hmmm...  :twisted:

Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 11
Post by: XcuteX26262X on December 31, 2010, 07:38:31 PM
 :otomerika: :yossi: HAPPY NEW YEAR~! :yossi: :otomerika:












In advance  XD

I hope you enjoy this chapter :)
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Chapter 12

“We apologize for interrupting regular broadcasting to bring you this MMN breaking news report.”

Risa dropped the remote as her eyes winded in shock. She quickly grabbed her coat and ran out her apartment. It was raining outside, but she didn’t stop to go back and take an umbrella with her, because she didn’t want to waste any little time she had. I can’t lose you…you can’t leave me…

“We are bringing you this image live. Right now, the fire department and the police are in the middle of trying to rescue a girl attempting to commit suicide. We’ve done some quick  researches, and the female’s name is Michishige Sayumi…”

Risa ran with all her might, turning right and left, bumping into people who afterward gave her ‘WTF?!’ looks. “Hey! You’re allowed to go up there!” a police man tried to stop her, but she pushed him away just like she did to the other ones.

After what seemed like forever, she finally reached her destination. Her lungs were burning; legs shaking and beads of sweat trickling down her forehead as she tried to catch her breath. “Sayu.” She managed to say.
As Sayumi turned around, her eyes winded when she saw Risa standing with her hands on her knees while gasping for air not so far away from where she was.

“Ri-Risa? What are you doing here?” Sayu said still shocked.

“I could ask you the same thing.” Risa said between gasps.

Before Sayu could say anything else, she felt a burning sensation on her left cheek. “What the hell is wrong with you?” after recovering from the slap. She turned her head to find her former friend crying. Risa…
“Why are you trying to kill yourself? You baka!”
“Risa I –“ Suddenly, her mind stopped and her whole body froze as she felt two pair of lips on hers. Is Risa kissing me right now?


[The next day]

Ai’s POV

I didn’t want this day to come, because today is the day where I’m going to get dragged out of my house against my will by none other than Miss Tanaka Reina.  My wonderful, gentle, caring, amazing friend…A friend that I wish I never knew!

Don’t you just hate it when people force you to do things? I don’t want to go to some park. What am I? An eleven year old! Even eleven year old girls hate parks nowadays; all they want is to be in a relationship…What has the world come to? Children used to be so innocent, and now…It’s the end of the world!

---

I was hoping that she would forget, or maybe something would come up, so she would call and cancel the whole thing, but it never happened. Screw my luck! I picked up my phone from the table and dialed my savior’s number. I waited a couple seconds before the person on the other line picked it up.

“Moshi moshi~!”

“Hey Jun!~” I was so happy she actually answered, I thought she was still mad at me for ditching her last week…and the week before, plus the week before that. I know you’re all probably thinking that I’m mean, but I’m not! That girl is creepy. She tries to kiss me all the time and she takes every single chance she gets to touch me in places she shouldn’t touch. Basically, she’s a pervert. Doesn’t she know when someone says no, it means no!

“Ai-chan~! I miss you~” she said trying to sound cute…Ew!

“Jun, no offence, but please don’t do that again, it doesn’t suite you, and it makes me feel like taking a tube and shoving it down my throat.” I heard her gasp.

“Ai-chan, you’re so mean!” she cried.

“I know, but isn’t that why you love me so much…?” I teased, knowing that she would start blushing, and stuttering.

“I-i-I hehe ha umm, yo-me-i-i-i….”

“Jun, are you okay? You sound flushed.” I teased more.

“….”

I’m so evil, I deserve an award. I waited for her reply, but it never came. So I spoke again.

“Jun, you –“

“What do you want?” she cut me off. She sounded mad…very mad.

“I’m sorry, I didn’t –“

“You know what. I’m sick of this! You think you can just do this to me every time?” what the hell is she talking about?

“I’m sick of you playing with my feelings all the time!” she started screaming over the phone.

“Stop yelling! I was just kidding!” I screamed back. Can’t she take a joke?

Apparently she can’t, because that was the last time we have spoken to each other. I’m such a horrible person; I only talk to her when I need something.

JunJun is a really nice girl, with a very big heart, I know she’ll forgive me, maybe not anytime soon, but she will. Junjun, I’m really sorry, but I can’t love you back. I knew all along about your feelings for me, and I pretended I knew nothing. You deserve much better than an asshole like me.

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Reina's POV

I woke up today feeling like shit. I haven’t been getting much sleep lately because I was trying to figure out what happened that night. Oh god, what in the world was I thinking?

{Flash back}

I leaned closer and gave her a kiss on her lips, and as I slowly pulled away, I saw her eyes open wide. I thought she was going to slap me, but she didn’t. She did the opposite. She leaned forward and closed the gap between our lips once again. As our kiss got deeper and hotter, I could feel her hand on my inner thigh, caressing it gently…
The next day, I woke up to find myself naked in bed with a girl I barely know. Eri…

{End of flash back}


To be continued...
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 12 (12/31)
Post by: kuro808 on December 31, 2010, 07:48:45 PM
We add the complexity to the issue although Ai seems to move forward while Risa is trying to help but I guess being over emotional
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 12 (12/31)
Post by: kano-chan on December 31, 2010, 11:16:50 PM
Oh, Risa just kissed Sayu. That IS more than making up....                                   Ehhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh???!!!! :mon wtfmm: **Shakes the table**  That caught me off guard! :on kimbo:

What is Risa thinking? I thought she loves Ai-chan... :(

And oh noooo, Jun is hurt! :cry: Ai-chan, be more careful with your words. I bet she wasn't like that until Risa hurt her, right?

TanaKamei kiss + bed = :mon blood: Eri just did it because of her unrequited love towards Ai-chan....? :O

Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 12 (12/31)
Post by: lil_hamz on January 01, 2011, 04:19:18 AM
Okay, am I the only one shocked at Risa kissing Sayu??? Hmmm, on second thoughts, I like it XD

TanaKamei is well....hmmmmm....hmmmm...hmmmmm :D

What about Ai-chan man, what about Ai-chan *mind in a whirl*
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 12 (12/31)
Post by: oddball on January 01, 2011, 01:48:03 PM
Blimey what a chapetr!  :shocked

Sayu tries to kill herself and gets saved by Risa and they, they kiss?!?  :O what's all that about?

So Ai is still miserable ad call's Jun, who is pissed with her aswell, poor Ai seems to have been a bit mean towards Jun and Jun chas had enough of her one sided love, I hope Jun finds some happiness....

So Reina slept with Eri!!!  :w00t: It seems as though Reina is very freaked out about the whole thing but I think that when she is calmed down both she andEri may be quite happy about the whole thing...
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 12 (12/31)
Post by: badsaints on January 03, 2011, 06:11:03 AM
Yabaiiiii!!!!

This story is making go :panic: Risa kissed Sayu when she likes Ai? :? Perhaps she's confused about her feelings? But she's not angry with the bunny anymore? Argh now I'm confused :banghead:

I like whats happening with TanaKame :inlove: Oooh wats gonna happen now?
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 12 (12/31)
Post by: XcuteX26262X on January 09, 2011, 05:09:40 PM
Sorry for possible grammar/spelling mistakes... :nervous I hope you enjoy this chapter. :)


Chapter 13

Sayumi’s POV

I was too stunned, I couldn’t even move. My whole body seemed as if it was frozen. Everything felt like it was in slow motion, and the only question that was running through my mind was “Is Risa kissing me right now?”
It was like a dream come true, I’ve always wanted her to kiss me, but it never happened…Until that day. I’m the one who made the first bold move, and got rejected.

“Risa, I think I’m in love with you…” I bravely confessed,

“Sayu, I’m sorry…” got rejected,

the end.

I’ve never been rejected before, so I didn’t know how it would feel like, and let me tell you something, it hurts, it hurts really bad. Especially If the person who rejected you is dear to your heart. I’m not going to lie and say I wasn’t jealous when I found out that she was dating Kei, because I was.
When that son of a bitch started going out with her, she stopped hanging out with me, she stopped calling me everyday, she stopped trying to make me laugh when I’m feeling down, and most of all, she stopped caring about me. That was all because of that bastard. I hate him, from the very start I knew he was a playboy, always changing girlfriends, or should I say ‘whores’? That’s why I seduced him, to show Risa the unfaithful douche bag he really is. I knew she was going to get hurt, but I had to do it. It needed to be done, for her sake.

SUICIDE ATTEMPT TURNS INTO REUNION…

The news about me trying to end my sad and miserable life was everywhere. Can’t a person try to kill themselves without having their faces on every fucking news paper the next day, not to mention live broadcast of their attempt. Great! Now, I can’t leave my house without a paper bag on my head. And what’s with the headline? Reunion? What fucking reunion? Get your facts straight! Risa and I are not…a couple.
I understand that suicide is a big deal in Japan: it has the highest rate of any first world country blah blah…but I’m going to ask you a question, and I want you to answer me honestly. Would you care if I killed myself?

“Of course!” she answered looking directly into my eyes.

“Would you care if Ai-chan killed herself?” I asked again not willing to break the eye contact. Her eyes winded as tears started to build up.

“What?” her voice became weak and shaky.

“Risa, why are you doing this to her? Don’t you know that she’s in love with you?” she looked away as she tried to blink back her tears. I reached and cupped her face with my hands, forcing her to look into my eyes again.
“She tried to kill herself you know? Reina called and told me everything, she even scolded me, but that doesn’t matter. What matter is: even thought Ai-chan told me that she doesn’t want to see you again, that she hates you. I don’t think she means it, she’s still in love with you.”

I wanted to say more, but was stopped by two hands on my waist and a face buried in the crook of my nick as I felt my shirt getting wet from her tears. “Sayu, I love her so much…” she said between sobs. “Cry all you want, I’ll still be here, I promise.”
I was happy that she finally let it all out, and the only thing I could do was hold her tight and assure her that everything will be alright.

---

Ai’s POV

“Why aren’t you dressed yet?”

“Just a second!”

“We’re gonna be late!”

“I said I’m coming!”

I was about to squeeze the life out of her. I wasn’t in a good mood to begin with, and her nagging didn’t help. I quickly finished my make up and walked out of my room. I decided to wear something simple:  Blue jeans with a brown leather belt, white buttoned shirt and a loose white sweater on top of it.  (http://img40.imageshack.us/img40/43/ai5k.jpg) I have to admit, I looked pretty cute…or at least I thought I looked cute.
 
“You’re seriously not gonna wear that, right?” she started scanning my body from head to toe.

“What’s wrong with it? And stop looking at me like that!”

After staying silent for a minute, she smiled and winked at me. “Nothing. come on, let's go.”  She linked arms with me as we walked out.

Okay, that was random. I thought to myself raising a brow.

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“You’ve got to be kidding me! I thought you said a park, not an AMUSEMENT park!” I can’t believe she lied to me. She knows how much I hate crowded places. I turned and was ready to leave, but she reached out and grabbed my arm. “I know you’re mad at me right now, but please just hear me out…”

She waited until I cooled down and then continued. “You’ve been going through a lot lately, and I hate seeing you like this. You rarely smile, and even if you do smile, I know you’re faking it. So please, let’s just have some fun today, and forget about everything. You and I, just like the good old days. Okay?”
When she noticed that I was about to cry, she gave me a deadly bear hug. “Ai-chan, you’re not gonna cry, right?” she asked as she squeezed. “How…Can…I...cry when you’re…suffocating me?” I said trying to get air into my lungs. She finally let go, and I could breathe again. She’s too strong for her tiny body.  “I’m not going to cry, just please don’t do that again.” She stuck her tongue out and then started walking. “Reina, you’re the best.” I giggled as I followed her.

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Reina’s POV

Where the hell are they? I thought we had agreed to meet here at 7 pm sharp. My mind was somewhere else, but I could still feel her eyes on me. “Reian, are you okay? You seem distant.” Yes, I am distant. I just hope Miss ichiban kawaii didn’t forget about our plan. “I’m fine.” I turned to face her with a smile. She smiled back as she turned her attention to the ice cream she was holding. “I love ice cream~!” I couldn’t help but grin, she’s too adorable. As I was busy staring at Ai-chan, I felt my phone vibrate in my pocket. I took out my phone and flipped it open. Sayu had sent me a message.

“I know you’re probably wondering where the heck are we, but please before snapping the phone shut, let me explain… while we we’re on our way, I saw this really cute jacket that will match my kawaii fuzzy boots, so when I went to the store, there was only one left and I just HAD to buy it before that ugly woman did. So yeah, that’s why we’re late. Okay, bye~!
Oh, right now, we’re entering the gate…”


I cursed under my breath as I snapped my phone shut. As I was waiting patiently, Ai-chan stood up and said: “I’m going to the toilet. Wait here, don’t move. I nodded as watched her disappear into the crowd.

From far away, I could see a person in pink waving their hand. “Sayu…” I could recognize her anywhere. I stood up waiting for her to get closer.
“Reina-chan!” she exclaimed as she gave me a hug. When we both backed away, I started searching for the person I’ve been waiting for the most. “Where is she? Don’t tell me that she didn’t come!” I said anger rising inside of me. “Don’t worry; she needed to use the toilet.” Sayu assured. I just hope this works…

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Risa’s POV

As I was walking, I bumped into someone, and we both fell on our butts. “Watch where you’re going, dammit!” I said irritated as I tried to get up. “I’m sorry I didn’t see you.” The other person apologized, which made me feel bad for raising my voice.  “Here, let me help you.” I offered my hand, and the person gladly accepted it.

“Thanks, look I’m really sor – “

Oh my god!

“R-r-risa!”

“Ai-chan!”

To be continued…
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 13 (1/9)
Post by: Swtme03 on January 09, 2011, 05:24:08 PM
AFGHOGHSOD:FNH:OUEH:FUNHF:KLAE:RH:AWLERH:L>>>>>>>>>>~~!!!#LKJ:LKJFD:SL
 :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic: :panic:

 :shocked

 :bleed eyes:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 13 (1/9)
Post by: kuro808 on January 09, 2011, 08:18:51 PM
Risa bumps into Ai :lol:

But Sayu being self-conscious really makes this story interesting
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 13 (1/9)
Post by: kano-chan on January 10, 2011, 12:50:01 AM
Holy cow! They actually bumped into each other in the restroom! :lol: And this time, Risa is the one cursing. :P Ai-chan was just being nice and apologized.  :wub:

What's going to happen now?? I hope Ai-chan doesn't blow up on Risa and the others! :mon scratch:

Or will this lead to TakaGaki's making up?! :mon pray2:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 13 (1/9)
Post by: oddball on January 10, 2011, 12:04:12 PM
Man I suppose Sayu's odd twisted logic of sleeping with Kei to show Gaki what a bastard he is kinda worked, even if it was, well a bit of a dodgy way to show it....

So Gaki does like Ai, and it seems as though Sayu and Rena have come up with this plan to get Gaki and Ai back together again, wether Ai will be able to keep her cool infront of Gaki, especially now that Sayu and Reina are not around to act as buffers, is a different matter......
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 13 (1/9)
Post by: lil_hamz on January 13, 2011, 10:27:33 AM
^ I agree on that. Sayu's way of making Gaki see what an A****** Kei is only makes Kei the winner? I mean....getting to bed Sayu?!?! *eyeballs pops out of eye sockets* The darn lucky fellow *grumble* XD

I'm interested to see how AiGaki interact. Especially since Gaki shot her mouth off and kinda scolded Ai for crashing into her :D
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 13 (1/9)
Post by: XcuteX26262X on January 31, 2011, 05:07:25 PM
Chapter 14


Risa’s POV


“Thanks, look I’m really sor – “

Oh my god!

“R-r-risa!”

“Ai-chan!”

Then she ran away. I tired to stop her by not letting go of her hand, but she looked at me with so much hatred, eyes filled with tears that I felt like someone took a sharp knife and started jabbing my heart with it repeatedly. I ended up letting go willingly, but slowly, I wanted to feel her warmth once again, because I missed her touch, I missed her. I wanted to tell her that. I wanted to tell her that I miss her so much, that I love her, and I’m sorry… but I couldn’t. I was so scared.

When she saw that I didn’t completely let go, she slapped my hand away, grabbed her bag off the floor, and started running with her tears freely flowing down her cheeks. All I could do was watch her as she disappeared. Niigaki Risa, you’re an asshole, she hates you, and you deserve it. I said as I bit on the inside my lower lip trying to distract myself from the tears building up in my eyes, but failing.

I fell down on my knees weeping my heart out, “Ai-chan I love you!” as I screamed out my confession; the feelings I’ve been hiding and denying for so long. For ten years! I’ve been in love with her for ten years, but I pretended I wasn’t. “I love her as a friend,” I used to say to myself every night, “nothing more, nothing less…” pushing the feelings away before falling asleep. I can’t do it any longer, I just can’t! I’m sick of pretending. I love her, and I want her to know that…I want her to love me again.

“I love you!” I screamed again not caring about the audience that I’ve drawn from earlier. They were staring at me, some whispering stuff about how disgusting I am, and some were actually feeling sorry for me.

My head hung low, but not ready to give up as I cried some more with my face in the ground. I didn’t want to give up, but eventually after sobbing, begging and screaming so much, I ended losing all my strength. I looked pathetic. At that moment I wanted to die. Why should I keep on living? I have no purpose in life anymore.  My life ended right before my eyes the moment I let her go without even trying to stop her.

I didn’t move from where I was, still on my knees with my head still hung low. I felt so hopeless, helpless, and lifeless. I was in so much pain, but it was nothing compared to the sharp, unbearable soreness in my empty, shattered heart.

Somehow, the tears didn’t stop, wouldn’t stop. Even after trying to compose myself by inhaling and exhaling deeply, they just kept falling.

Suddenly, someone grabbed my hands furiously, pulled me up to my feet and started dragging me with so much force. My vision was all blurry, thus I couldn’t see who the person was because of the warm unstoppable tears that filled my damn eyes! I twisted painfully, desperately trying to get out of the person’s strong grip, but I was too weak. All of a sudden, I was pushed to a wall. “Itai!” I flinched as my back hit the hard concrete.

“What do you think you’re doing?!” That voice…

When I opened my eyes, I saw her standing inches away from me. She was so close I could feel her hot breath against my face. I looked deep into her red swollen eyes and saw nothing but sorrow. I could see that she was hurting, and it was all because of me. I did this to her… I hurt her. I reached out my hand and wiped the fresh tears from her sorrowful eyes.

“Gaki-san…” she sighed as I gently stroked her cheek with my thumb, while looking into her eyes, her beautiful brown eyes.
You’re so beautiful. You’re eyes, your lips… I thought as my gaze traveled down to her soft luscious lips. I wanted to kiss her so bad, but I didn’t want to ruin the moment. I wanted us to stay like this forever.

“Risa, please kiss me…” and I was more than happy to cater to her request.

To be continued…

Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 14 (1/31)
Post by: kuro808 on January 31, 2011, 07:20:48 PM
Risa and Ai made up \o/ hopefully it stays together :nervous
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 14 (1/31)
Post by: Swtme03 on February 01, 2011, 02:31:14 AM
WAAAHH!!!! OMGAAAAAAA!!!!!
 :panic:
I need more chapters!!  :bleed eyes:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 14 (1/31)
Post by: kano-chan on February 01, 2011, 09:53:18 AM
You made it sound so sad! :gyaaah:

I wouldn't mind slapping some of her audience! :mon zoom:

But I'm happy they made up..sorta?
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 14 (1/31)
Post by: oddball on February 01, 2011, 12:21:07 PM
I looked deep into her red swollen eyes and saw nothing but sorrow. I could see that she was hurting, and it was all because of me. I did this to her… I hurt her. I reached out my hand and wiped the fresh tears from her sorrowful eyes.
To be continued…

Hmm, I'm not fully bying at the moment that Ai and Gaki have really made up, Even if Gaki shouted out loud desperatly that she loved A, and even if Ai came back, perhaps the part you quote gives us a bit of insight into how Ai really feels about the situation, It's just how you mentioned that Ai' s eyes were filled with sorrow and hurt, and this is when she came back mind, I dunno, I just dont fully by the whole happy couple thing yet....
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki] Update - Chapter 14 (1/31)
Post by: XcuteX26262X on February 17, 2011, 02:58:52 AM
Sorry for possible grammar/spelling mistakes.

Chapter 15

“So…I guess everything will be fine now, right?” Miss ichiiban kawaii tried to start a conversation with a spaced out kitty. When she saw that her companion didn’t respond, she stopped and started waving her hand in front the kitten’s blank face. “Hello~! Earth to Reina!”

“For fuck’s sake, how old are you? Would you stop doing that voice?! It’s fucking annoying!” The kitten lashed out causing the chou kawaii bunny to gasp in shock and back away with her hands clasped against her cheeks. “Reina-chan, you’re mean~!” the bunny cried as she stared at her friend with the fakest pout Reina had ever seen.

“I swear imma knock yo teeth out!”

“…!”

If you could see Sayu’s face right now, it would be just like anyone’s after watching that infamous ‘2 girls 1 cup’ video. Completely taken aback by Reina’s anger, she decided to become smart and shut her mouth, because she knew Reina wasn’t kidding, and the last thing she wanted was to be a known as THE toothless Miss ichiiban kawaii. That wouldn’t be pretty, now would it? After that, both of them were walking in silence, none of them wanted to say a word…but if you knew Sayumi, you would know that the girl was born mouth first, which means she just can’t keep her mouth shut.

“Reina?” she started.

“What is it?”

“There is something that has been bothering me even since I saw you today…I’m just gonna be blunt and say it.”

“When haven’t you ever been blunt? Miss ‘I don’t take advice from ugly people.’” Reina said raising an eyebrow.

Totally ignoring Reina’s last comment, she continued.

“What is that mark on you neck?”

“What mark?” Reina questioned, touching her neck.

“That mark over there… It looks like a hickey.” She pointed.

“WHAT?!” completely freaking out, the yankee tried to hide the love mark with her hair strains. “I have no idea what you’re talking about…” she laughed nervously, still trying to cover the visible bite, but she knew it wasn’t going to disappear. I should've concealed it with make up…

“Oh, I think you know exactly what I’m talking about. You’re not going anywhere until you tell me who gave you that hickey.” Sayu crossed her arms over her chest while looking at Reina with a serious expression. Wow, you don’t see that very often.

After explaining everything, the bunny was left speechless with her eyes wide open and her jaw almost touching the floor. “Ah, sou …?” was all she could say.

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Two days later.

A girl sat on the floor in the empty dark hallway, leaning up against the wall while hugging her knees to her chest. “What have I done?” fighting back the tears as she remembered what happened that night. “I shouldn’t have kissed her; I shouldn’t have…slept with her. It was a mistake, but why does it feel so right?” She was about to let the tears flow, when suddenly her cell phone went off. She quickly wiped the tears and got up. When she reached the cell, it stopped ringing. Slowly picking it up, she flipped it open and stared at the screen for a while. Her mind started drifting away when a sudden vibration and a ‘ting’ sound got her back to reality.
 
I need to talk to you. I’m standing outside your house at the moment, please it’s important.
- Reina.


“Reina…” she sighed.  A part of the girl didn’t want to see Reina, but another part of her wanted to so bad.

“Eri, we need to talk. Please open the door.” Debating on whether to open the door or not, she decided to go with her gut feeling. I’m just going to make things clear and tell her to leave me alone…
She walked to the door and inhaled slowly before slightly opening it. “Reian, what do you want? Just leave me alone. There is nothing to talk about…Goodbye.” The word ‘cold’ can’t even describe how Eri was acting toward Reina. Even since that…incident, it’s almost like she became a different person.
 
She attempted to slam the door shut, but a hand stopped it. “Eri, you can’t ignore me forever. Why are you doing this?” Reina said with a pleading voice, but Eri once again didn’t show any emotion. Irritated by her behavior, Reina pushed her inside to a wall and gripped her shoulders tightly. “Why are you being like this? Don’t tell me the night we spent together didn’t mean anything to you, because it did to me. Even after trying to convince myself that it was a mistake, and shit happens all the time. I can’t stop thinking about it, about you…about us.”
Reina was expecting what she had just said would knock some since into the emotionless girl, but when she saw the blank face she hated so much, that made her angrier. She started shaking Eri violently, “Why are you doing this?” hot tears streaming down her face as she waited for an answer. “Answer me dammit!” she screamed, feeling both frustrated and desperate. “Because ignoring you is the only way I can prevent myself from falling even harder in love with you!” Now it was Eri’s turn to cry. “Do you know how hard it is…” her lips started trembling as she looked at the girl standing in front of her.

Reina’s grip loosened as she tried to process what she had just heard. “Reina, I love you so much that it hurts…I want to be with you, but I can’t. You and I are two different people. You don’t know me, and I don’t know you. How can I make sure that what happened wasn’t just a mistake, and my feelings for you–“ Reina’s lips silenced her. They felt so gentle, so soft, and so…familiar. Eri responded almost immediately, surprising herself. She wrapped her arms around Reina’s waist, pulling her closer for more body contact. Her hands travelled from the girl’s waist to her butt, squeezing gently. She received a soft moan in return. She started liking Reina’s bottom lip, asking for entrance to her mouth, which Reina happily obliged. Isn’t it ironic how moments ago she told the girl she’s hungrily making out it to leave her alone?
 
They broke away to catch their breath, and as they parted they gazed into each other’s eyes. “Eri, I love you.” Reina said in the sweetest, most sincere loving voice Eri had ever heard. “I love you too.”

To be continued...

TanaKame~ :heart: I feel so proud of myself. :D
Do my awesome readers want TanaKame to stay together or...? :twisted:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki, TanaKame] Update - Chapter 15 (2/16)
Post by: kano-chan on February 17, 2011, 05:17:31 AM
**Cold Kame** Noooo!!! :cry:

**Kissu** Yessss!!! :mon crazyinlove:

lol....Be proud. XD

hmm.....That evil face tells me that you might do the opposite of what we choose... :O2 :lol: You're not planning anything ebil are you? :O :P

Now, what's going to happen to TakaGaki? :?
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki, TanaKame] Update - Chapter 15 (2/16)
Post by: kuro808 on February 17, 2011, 05:44:28 AM
Up front Eri  :twothumbs

Well I guess she had to do it to get Reina straight
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki, TanaKame] Update - Chapter 15 (2/16)
Post by: oddball on February 17, 2011, 11:15:47 AM
Poor Reina having to got through the "Ichiiban Kawaii" routine because she was spacing out  :doh:

Eri and Reina.... seems as though Eri is almost afraid to go with her gut feelings on how she likes Reina, afraid that what thye may have is lust rather than love.......
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki, TanaKame] Update - Chapter 15 (2/16)
Post by: kRisZ on February 18, 2011, 01:23:14 PM
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And plus, he’s not that bad looking, he’s actually very handsome…too bad, I don’t like men.
Poor guy lol

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She also never had friends, because she enjoys her own company, she is her own best friend.
Being alone is lonely

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Goodbye, Risa…
No  :(

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My cheeks were burning; my whole body was feeling hot. What is wrong with you? Why are you feeling like this? This is not the first time a girl gets way too close to you? You’re always like this with Ai-chan? But, this is…different. What are you thinking!?
She likes Eri.?.   :huhuh  But Eri likes Ai  :O And Ai will try to like Reina.?.  :shocked

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“Don’t forget, always use protection!”
XD

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“You’re irritating me, and I’m getting fed up with you.” I said with a cold voice. As I was walking closer, she started whimpering. “Tanaka-san, you're scaring me…”
Whoa!

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“Does she know that I might have feelings for her?”
Risa, you're confusing me  :dizzy:

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“And…?”
:grr:

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“What? Don’t look at me like that. You’re scaring me.” Kei said with a mocking voice, and then he smirked. “I’m not sure if you’re aware of this, but I don’t care about either you or that slut Risa.”
OMG  :on voodoo:  :knee:  :kickass:

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The hardest thing to do is to watch the one you love, love someone else.
True, but you'll get over it in time

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“Look, usa-chan. I’m a man. Men need sex. It doesn’t matter where they’re getting it from, as long as they get it.”
:mon fierce:

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“Come on~! Just let me kiss you~!” the bunny said as she tried to pull his pants down.
OMG  :mon freeze:

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They both glared at each other, but then Mike grinned. “If you do that, I’ll give you my Vampire Knight collection…”

“Deal.”
XD

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“We apologize for interrupting regular broadcasting to bring you this MMN breaking news report.”

Risa dropped the remote as her eyes winded in shock.   
Who's in the news? Sayu?

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I can’t lose you…you can’t leave me…
Ai.?.

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“We are bringing you this image live. Right now, the fire department and the police are in the middle of trying to rescue a girl attempting to commit suicide. We’ve done some quick  researches, and the female’s name is Michishige Sayumi…”
Eh?! Why's almost everyone committing suicide?!  :scared:

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“Risa I –“ Suddenly, her mind stopped and her whole body froze as she felt two pair of lips on hers. Is Risa kissing me right now?

 :shocked   :mon freeze:   :OMG:

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Even eleven year old girls hate parks nowadays; all they want is to be in a relationship…What has the world come to? Children used to be so innocent, and now…It’s the end of the world!
lol

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“Ai-chan, you’re so mean!” she cried.

“I know, but isn’t that why you love me so much…?” I teased, knowing that she would start blushing, and stuttering.
lol

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The next day, I woke up to find myself naked in bed with a girl I barely know. Eri…
Yay! TanaKame  :mon money:

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“Is Risa kissing me right now?”
Seriously?!  :shocked

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“Risa, I think I’m in love with you…” I bravely confessed,

“Sayu, I’m sorry…” got rejected,

the end.
:rofl: Sorry but I really find this funny  XD

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“How…Can…I...cry when you’re…suffocating me?”
:lol:

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“I know you’re probably wondering where the heck are we, but please before snapping the phone shut, let me explain… while we we’re on our way, I saw this really cute jacket that will match my kawaii fuzzy boots, so when I went to the store, there was only one left and I just HAD to buy it before that ugly woman did. So yeah, that’s why we’re late. Okay, bye~!
Oh, right now, we’re entering the gate…”
XD  XD  XD

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Don’t worry; she needed to use the toilet.”
So unintentionally the two are in the toilet  :mon mischief:

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“I swear imma knock yo teeth out!”
:lol:

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“Because ignoring you is the only way I can prevent myself from falling even harder in love with you!” Now it was Eri’s turn to cry. “Do you know how hard it is…”
Hmmm, but do you have to?

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“Reina, I love you so much that it hurts…I want to be with you, but I can’t. You and I are two different people. You don’t know me, and I don’t know you. How can I make sure that what happened wasn’t just a mistake
Why not try it first  :monkey:


Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki, TanaKame] Update - Chapter 15 (2/16)
Post by: XcuteX26262X on May 30, 2011, 02:53:12 PM
Sorry for possible grammar/spelling mistakes.

Chapter 16

With my tear streaked face I stood there, watching them. I couldn’t believe it, no, I didn’t want to believe it! Although it was happening right in front of me, I still couldn’t accept it.
And I thought going to an amusement park would make me forget about everything…I should’ve kept sulking in my room instead.

The way they gazed into each other’s eyes, the way they hugged, and way they kissed… there was no mistaking, that was love; the love I’ve been yearning for all these years. Her love.

My heart was yelling at me to turn around and run away as fast as my legs would let me because it was in pain, but somehow, I couldn’t. I was just standing there, letting it break into pieces…completely unhealable pieces.

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Sitting on a bench and looking at the stars through tear filled eyes.  "Why? How many times did I say it? I love you. Why can’t you feel the same way?"

Does she even remember the first time I confessed to her?

It was when I first came to Japan five years ago as an exchange student, leaving my friends behind.
Her dad discovered me when he was on a business trip to China and was impressed with my skills I guess, that’s why he had offered to pay for my education here in Japan, and after that he would give me a position in one of his companies. He’s such a nice guy, I don’t understand why she hates him so much. Is it because she’s the heir to Takahashi Corporation? She’s really stupid! I wish my family was extremely rich. I wish my family owned various houses and islands around the world. You're blessed. So please Ai, stop being so stupid and just be grateful that at least your parents still remember you, unlike mine…

At that time I didn’t know anyone besides that annoying kid, AKA LinLin who kept following me everywhere thinking we’re friends just because we both are from the same country. Some people just don’t get that when someone is ignoring them, it means that person doesn’t want anything to do with them. Leave. Me. Alone! I want to yell at her face every time she holds my hands, but I can't. Curse my good manners!

I can still remember the first time we met, Ai...

“Hello, my name is Takahashi Ai, but you can call me Ai-chan. Nice to meet you.”

You were so nice to me, always asking if I needed anything. My Japanese was horrible, so most of the time I couldn’t understand what you're was talking about, but you were so warm-hearted and patient with me that you would repeat the sentence over and over again, adding hand gestures until I understood.

Having a conversation with anyone wasn’t easy because of the language barrier, but with her it was.

She made me feel safe, loved and happy. For the first time, I was actually happy. I was smiling, that was something rare, but I was. I never wanted it to go that far, but it happened. Slowly, she made me fall for her. I fell so hard that I just couldn’t help but make any kind of physical contact with her when she was with me. I know it made her feel uncomfortable, but it was something I couldn’t control. So, does she remember the first time I confessed to her? No, because I never did. And now, I won't ever be able to...

The real reason behind me accepting her father’s proposal and coming to Japan was because I didn’t have anywhere else to go. My family disowned me when they found out that I like girls. All they care about is their reputation, and they would do anything to keep their perfect middle class image, even if it meant throwing their only child out onto the street.

Such great parents…

I must've been crying, because a girl sat next to me and gave me her handkerchief. “Is everything alright?” she asked.
Oh, I’m just fine! The person I care about and love the most broke my heart. I hate my parents so much, but I can’t stop thinking about them! I wanted to be alone, but you just had to come and sit next to me, acting all concerned and shit like you care! I wanted snap at her, but what came out was: “I’ll be fine…” as I wiped away my tears with the plain pink handkerchief.

“Thank you.” I said, faintly smiling at her.

“No problem,” She smiled back and extended her hand to me, “I’m Sayu by the way.”

“I’m Junjun.” I shook her hand feeling slightly better than before.

She’s so nice…
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki, TanaKame] Update - Chapter 16 (5/30)
Post by: kano-chan on May 30, 2011, 10:18:03 PM
Update!  :cow: I sorta had to go back a couple pages to refresh my memory. :nervous

I'm kinda sad about AiJun, but now there's SayuJun! :w00t: :heart:
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki, TanaKame] Update - Chapter 16 (5/30)
Post by: oddball on May 31, 2011, 12:53:10 PM
Aww poor Jun, having her heart broken by Ai  :cry: seems as though perhaps Sayu might just of turned up at the right time, not just for Jun, but perhaps for herself as well?.....
Title: Re: I Don't Want You Back [TakaGaki, TanaKame] Update - Chapter 16 (5/30)
Post by: Sora-chan on August 07, 2011, 05:28:51 AM
KYAAAAAAAAAA  :mon lovelaff: Yesssssss!! *dances around happily and jumps up and down* HA YATTA!! The TanaKame moment i was waiting on just sent me to heaven :)  :mon angel:  :mon love: <3333 i love you lol  :ptam-kiss: