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The Hello! Project Fanfics => H!P Fanfics => Topic started by: aya-chii on March 25, 2011, 03:19:42 AM
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starting another fic again. i'm sorry about the untitled one, i suddenly got writer's block at the very first chappie :nervous:
but then, i'll be graduating from highschool on Wednesday so i'll have lots of time to do and think about this on vacation *yey~*
this is my first time writing a.. momusu fic [?] , so it's quite a challenge for me knowing that i dont know them much XD
i'll try my best to keep this (i never had a finished fic). i'll.. really... try.. my best.. GANBARRE!
please support me! (thank you)
epilogue..? Chappie 1
Takahashi Ai is dead.
It kept ringing on Risa's head. Like an series of echoes bouncing against the walls of her head. And it's getting louder, and louder, coming to multiples each and every time. Noisy... She covered her ears, hoping that it would dissipate the irritating noise. But still, it echoed, louder, like it's the only existing sound of this-- her world.
She screamed. Her knees fell in the damp sidewalk, as she clutch her own head which seems going to explode any minute from now. Her world seems in a daze, a blur, in a fast motion of time, watching those footsteps halt, and go soon as they decide that this girl is none of their business. Too bad, no one's gonna help you now...
"Takahashi Ai is dead."
Formality.
They already knew it, before Tsunku announced it, and they didn't want to believe it. They gathered at his presence, patiently and silently hoped that he would say the opposite, that Ai-chan is safe and sound.. that she's just taking a rest in the hospital; though they knew nothing but clarification of the shocking news will be uttered.
"..car accident."
Risa heard someone breaking into sobs after few moments of deafening silence. Muffled, soft sobs, 'til someone joined it. And more, coming into hard crying. She saw the feet of some of her fellow members as she continued to gaze on the floor, walking across to huddle altogether into one bunch of crying girls. Yet she remained seated, stiffened and strict. She doesn't want to look-up, she knew herself she would broke into tears if she did. But, she can't betray it. She felt her eyes welling, 'til a droplet streamed down her cheek.
That's it. She wiped it, erasing its existence, as she stood up. She kept her eyes straight ahead, to something but nothing through the blank wall.
"Risa-chan..?" A horse voice mumbled.
She let her eyes roll to side, letting her see those teary girls stare at her like she's kind of something unexplainable and undefinable. She furiously took back her gaze, and walk briskly toward the door.
"Niigaki-san--" is what she heard from the masculine voice of Tsunku before closing the door after her.
She stumbled as she tried taking off her shoes while limping across her apartment. It's already dark, and none of the lights were flicked open. She really, don't mind, at all. Why think about that at such time as this? She made her way to kitchen and opened the fridge, a bottle of half-empty wine at the far end. The wine she and Ai shared the last time she visited her...
She let herself fall onto the soft-cushioned seat as she drank the wine from the bottle itself. She let out a clumsy sigh as her throat burned from the sudden amount of wine flowed through it. Her head fell backwards against the cushion, like they way it falls every time she laughs at Ai as she sat on her lap. She smiled to herself. Funny how appreciated things are, now you're gone...
Gone.
Dead.
Ai-chan.
And that one droplet of tear earlier flowed abundantly at the moment. She bit her lip, hiccuping the noise that lumps in her throat as she try to keep it to herself. Without any success, it escaped from her lips... the sorrow, the pain, the loneliness. She curled, fitting herself on that seat and bawled like a kid. Her bestfriend, her very best friend... The one who had always been there for her all these years of struggle after joining Musume. Who had been always helping her in everything. Whose smiles never failed to encourage her. Who cried with her at times like this. The girl who always.. always...every... everything...
She lifted-up from her disoriented, curled up self. The moonlight spilled to the room, limited by the frames of the wide balcony glass doors. The thin, white curtains flew gracefully and lightly with the blowing wind, seemingly inviting Risa to come over.
"Come with me Risa."
"I'm sorry but I made plans with Er--"
"Forget it. Just please come with me."
"I'm really sorry Ai-chan, Eririn was written first in my schedule."
She can remember smiling teasingly back at her leader, as Ai smiled lightly to her. That was the last conversation she had with Ai, few moments before the accident. She hugged herself against the cold breeze swept past her body. Her gazed roamed down the busy lives below, the city lights sparkling like fireflies. Yet she can't make herself believe that it is beautiful, and stared on the night sky instead. The moon was lonely... the lil' stars' sparks can be barely seen with the amount of glow coming from the land of Tokyo. Maybe she should had canceled Eririn's, and should had just come with Ai instead. She realized, how sincere Ai sounded that time.. that last time. Her eyes welled-up more, the guilt.. regret. She should have come with Ai... Ai-chan.. Ai-chan..
"AI-CHAN!!!"
She yelled on top of her voice, before breaking down to cries once again. Was Ai-chan lonely as the moon before she fell into infinite slumber? She should have been there with her... to share the last moments of Ai's life with her.. even.. at least died with her.
The far ground down below seems inviting.
"Risa."
Maybe before she jump she might as well give a chance to whoever calling her, just like what she should have done at Ai's last wish. She spun around in haze and--- good heavens! what she sees. "W-wha--the.. WTF" She's really drunk, she really need to jump now before admitting she's insane. "Y--you.. u!!!"
"You called me?"
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I dunno if I'm convincing enough..
Open for criticism!
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Please don't get Writer's Block on this. Please, please, please, you definitely have my attention! A Hammied Ai-chan in the first chapter, followed by a ghostly appearance. Moar! :on comhere: Moar, moar, moar!! :lol: :lol:
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"Takahashi Ai is dead." .........................W-what tehh- :on blackhole: :mon slapself: :mon freeze: :frustrated: :mon runcry: :bleed eyes:
Omg, what a start. Is Ai-chan a ghost or something?? :shocked Did she fake her death?? :shocked It didn't sound like Gaki loved Ai-chan since she went with Kame instead. :O Only thought of Ai-chan as a best friend. :(
Please continue~ :twothumbs
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WHAT!!! AI IS DEAD!!! :panic: :panic: :panic:
Poor Risa seems so devistated by her death but she's called her back from death or something? Unless, your title.... did Ai perhpas fake her death?
intresting strat looking forward to more :twothumbs
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I'm glad I decided to log in & check this thread. This is interesting! Aichan is a ghost & back from the dead? Reminds me of a movie I watched recently.
Can't wait for next chappie :w00t:
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So Ai is a ghost... and she comes back to Risa... I LIKE THIS!!! :w00t: Can't wait for more!!! :cow:
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Is Ai a dancing vampire?
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@rndmnwierd. haha. here's now the chappie two, so far, writer's block case still isn't happening. XD
@kano-chan. sorry for that start. don't worry, ai-chan will still stay with us. :twothumbs:
@oddball. well, the title.. i dunno, it just came out randomly :lol: i'm not really good at titles, but at least it hints something..?
@badsaints. i'm glad to hear you did come back ;) please continue checking this thread from now on. haha
@bamtai. yeah! you don't have to wait for more *whooottss~* i hope you'll like the 2nd chappie :D
@resop2. when i read your comment-- "that would be sexy *imagines* :drool: "
Thank you for coming by. I hope you guys remain commenting here, it really makes me glad and encourages me to write more :cow:
Chappie 2
She weakly staggered under the rain as she choked and waved her hand on her face like shooing away a puff of smoke that seemed to come out of her mouth.
She found herself in the middle of the road. Oh yeah, what the heck is she doing in the middle of the road? Not to mention it is raining...
But more than that, cars didn't ran over her but stayed unmoving with their drivers' head popping out of their windows. People on sidewalks stood staring, some with mouths agape, hands over their mouths, or whatever ridiculous reaction you can find from a shocked person. Is this how the world looks like within a frozen time? Okay. Is it her fault? Oh yes, you're standing in the middle of the road which is made for vehicles and not for your convenience.
Soon, voices sounded back to life. Drivers jumped out of their cars, some not minding the rain, and everyone walked forward. She felt herself stepping back as multitudes came nearer. They began running... past her. So it is not her. But not also just something ordinary?
She turned around and found people crowding not so far ahead of her. She walked forth, along with few who were left behind by the first wave of frantic people. A bunch of disarrayed cars, seemingly were not damaged that much compared to a toppled over car, where tension arises. A guy or two bent over the shattered glass window of passenger seat. They were yelling, but she couldn't make out the words with those other voices overlapping it. Soon, the guy in plain white shirt stretched his hand inside, reaching for something, until the other guy helped out.
The hard rain hitting the concrete ground become louder and louder, piercing through the unruly noise of her surrounding. And at a blink, she heard nothing.. completely nothing... continued staring to nothing but to something the guys trying to gently pull out, like it is something she should expect, very.. important. A bloodied arm...
"Car accident..."
It was such a soft whisper that echoed in her muted moment.
Ai heard the unruly noise once again, and realized she is staring to a girl beside her. She's a meter away from her, and her sullen gaze laid upon the scene. She might be a few years younger than her, and her height is not that very much taller than Ai. Her dark hair hints a bit of brownish red.
"..again." Her voice is stained with grim sadness. "Such a tragic ending neh?" . She faintly smiled, and Ai realized that she seemed to have the same false teeth as her kouhai Airi. She's staring back at her. Her eyes have dark orbs, pale and nothing.. like lifeless..?
Ai gasped within at the thought. She felt like answering, but nothing came out of her slightly parted lips. To keep her uneasiness from the staring girl, she turned her eyes once again back to the scene in front of her. But only saw the backs of other audiences. When was she pushed far aback---
"You better not stay here." The girl spoke again. "It will not be a very pleasant scene.. for you."
And the girl was gone beside her.
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Dark. Already dark. How come time flies so fast without noticing it. Ai sighed as she sat silently within her lifeless apartment. She's definitely saving a huge amount of electricity. Everything is stuck. Nothing would budge as she tries to flick the light on, click the remote, open the fridge, tap the faucet open, nothing. Did someone played a prank on her and poured a decent amount glue on every single switch they found on her house? Well, they did a pretty good job, she'll pay them big time.
Amazingly, she's still not hungry after all the tiring events of the day. Well, that's a pretty good thing, she can't turn the stove too. She's not sleepy at all too.. her body is not demanding any amount of rest.
"WAAAAAAAHHHH~!"
This sucks. What the hell is happening. She stood up, she need to try lightning up her home once again. Feels so healthy today, she can clearly see in the dark?
"AI-CHAN!!!"
That voice. No matter how unpleasant that yell sounds, she can never mistake that voice. And it sounds so desperate. Needy.Dark. Miserable. Resentful. Mournful. Risa...?
Her sight seemed to tighten, to narrow, to constrict like being sucked up into one point in front of her. Risa... Risa needs her.
She turned around and in a blink she's now standing somewhere. It is also dark, only the balcony shone with the bathe of moonlight. She almost didn't recognize she's in her bestfriend's apartment, not until she Risa's figure wobbling against the balustrade.
"Risa." She gently called out.
Ai slowly walked towards the balcony, watching Risa weakly turn around. She can't tell how surprised Risa seems, as her unsettled hair shadow her face. "Y--you.. u!!!"
"You called me?"
"W-What-- are you-you doi--here!" Risa stuttered, having hard time to say the words. "You're.. you'r-- DON'T GET ANY NEARER!"
Confused, Ai halted by the balcony door, completely exposed under the sweet moonlight and it seems Risa's eyes just grew wider than saucers. Her eyeliner is such a mess under her welling, wet eyes. Wait... "Were--Are you crying Risa-chan?"
Instinctively, Ai took further steps towards Risa, reaching her hand. Her state makes Ai want to hug her, comfort her.. cradle her in her arms and cry along.
"NO!!!"
She shouted with a firm voice. Once again, Ai-chan paused, now nearly wanting to cry. "Why... why Risa-chan?"
Risa now completely fell on the floor, Ai watching her bottle of wine roll to somewhere. She hiccuped, and sob. "You don't have to haunt me Ai-chan."
Ai, who had been wanting to reach for her friend and catch her before Risa fell, just knelt instead, leveling her gaze on Risa's bowed head. "What.. do you mean..."
"I know I had been a bad girl, Ai-chan!" She looked up at Ai. "But... Moouuu~ you don't have to scare me to death!" Her head fell down again as she chuckled. "You see," She smiled at her. "I'm now going to jump-off. You should have just waited in heaven."
Ai felt herself shivered at Risa's words. She tried to put up her smile again, "Cum'on~ You.. you don't have to joke me like that." She crawled nearer to Risa. "You could have gotten away from me with your wine by just saying sorry, k? So gather yourself up and don't joke anymore!"
Her last sentence shook, as she felt herself breaking to tears. Her hands just passed through Risa's shoulder when she tried to hold her.
I'm dead....?
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my butt hurts sitting on this chair. :sweatdrop:
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So, Ai has finally realized she's dead. Somehow, I think I could see Risa being the one to comfort Ai. :lol:
my butt hurts sitting on this chair.
This has to be one of the more interesting author's notes I've ever read. :lol: :lol:
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Ai can't touch Risa?? :shocked Well yes, normally ghost CAN'T really touch, that's true but still... No hugging, no kissing?? :cry:
Yep, I liked this chappie :lol: I guess I'll also like the next one :P There just isn't enough TakaGaki love :wub:
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Ai finally realised she's a goner :doh: I can't blame Risa for freaking out. I would if someone dead appeared in front of me, no matter how much I missed that person lol :lol:
"..again." Her voice is stained with grim sadness. "Such a tragic ending neh?" . She faintly smiled, and Ai realized that she seemed to have the same false teeth as her kouhai Airi.
I'm a little confused though. Who was that person who died in the beginning of the chap? Was it Ai herself or a stranger who kinda resemble Airi a little?
my butt hurts sitting on this chair.
This has to be one of the more interesting author's notes I've ever read. :lol: :lol:
Yeah this made me lol'd :lol: :lol: :lol: Hope your butt recovers in time for the new chap :P
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Mysterious girl!! Maybe she can help Ai-chan or something. There has to be touching! :tama-mad: XD
Wow...Gaki totally freaked out, but why would she commit suicide for Ai-chan? They're best friends, but she's got other friends too. Like Kame.
This chapter answered my question. Ai-chan is a ghosttt! :shocked: (late reaction?)
Anyway, the first part of this chapter was exciting. :twothumbs I thought Ai-chan brought Gaki back to the scene of the car accident. :lol: :nervous But it was Ai-chan and some toothy girl. XD
Awaiting for next update. :grin:
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Woah, is the toothy girl the ghost of the member of Country Musume who died?
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OH man, is Risa gonna succeed in killing herself? *scared* I still don't know how Ai managed to return considering that she's dead. Is this some kind of a connection between them? Or is she back for a purpose? So many questions! Ahhh it's driving me crazy cuz I wanna read the next chapter so bad. Please update soon. Arigatou~~
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@rndmnwierd. haha. sorry about that :peace: though it really still hurts until now =__=
@bamtai. err-- hard to admit, ghost really can't touch... but that's the THING, right? how could i label this fic "TakaGaki" without any slightest ... display of something? :roll:
@badsaints. same here! that would be freaky... don't worry, i changed my chair :D
@kano-chan. THERE HAS TO BE, right?! yes, ai-chan is. and THERE HAS TO BE SOMETHING!!! :panic:
@resop2. pssshhhttt!!! why you're smart?! :doh: but then, since you already know and it's not much of a big deal, i guess it is safe to say - Yes, she is :yep:
@lil_hamz. welcome to the club! (ehe? club?) we can't have risa dead :shocked: ! haha. we gonna know more about that in further chappies so please stay with us :)
anyways, the touching issue... that's a big deal for all of us, neh? I, honestly, still haven't realized the whole situation until you raised the question :nervous: the day i thought of starting a fic, i have at least 3 random plots in my mind and i ended up just choosing this one without analyzing much the future stuffs to happen.
but then, LIKE I WOULD ALLOW THIS STORY GO ON WITH NO TAKAGAKI LOVE?! :angry: yada yada yada!
and so, yeah, i served myself a tougher challenge. :banghead: i'll try my best to do something about that. though, not as often and as common or as mushy as alive person can do... but that makes the story a bit different and unusual, hmm?
Chappie 3
"Car accident."
"Yes."
It was just a flat sentence, monotonous for a question, yet Risa still felt answering. Sober now, she finally realized that she wasn't just drunk to see a dead white Ai walking earlier in her apartment, dimly glimmering like a 'glow-in-the-dark' stuff.
She's back in her couch once again, her knees bent and close to her chest. She's sitting sideways, facing left and not to Ai who's either sitting on the floor or standing across her. She doesn't know, and doesn't mind to know... she's still hesitating to face the fact that, indeed, Ai's presence is with her.
"Everyone knows."
"Tsunku announced earlier today. Don't know if the public knows, I didn't wait for him to say it anym--"
"You walked out."
She did, she walked out. She doesn't want to hear more of it. It's too much, too much to take. "Yes"
"How rude of you."
Risa giggled softly and briefly. "Yes, how rude of me."
She heard Ai giggled softly on her own too. It faded soon, and silence once again. Perhaps she still haven't grasped the whole situation, she might still be in haze, or dreaming, completely talking with someone whom she knew was dead.
"I'm dead." The word resounded again.
"Yes." She answered back without hesitation. Yes, this is just a dream.
"Pathetic."
Yeah, how pathetic, enough to make Risa insane. Yeah, she shouldn't have joked about jumping. It's pathetic. Everything is pathetic. Pathetic.
"I still haven't watched the news, ya know."
"Hmm.." Risa felt the unfamiliarity with the lost of "Yes" after Ai's sudden brought up of different stuff.
"I can't turn on the TV. In fact, none would get to life."
Life, Risa repeated in her mind. Like a detective taking down the important notes. She continued listening.
"I walked into your apartment without knowing."
Knowing, Risa noted once again. She added, - that she's dead.
She heard Ai inhaling deeply before continuing. "It was scary."
Scary. The last word was shaky.
"It was scary, Risa-chan..." Ai repeated once again, her words trembling into cry.
Unfortunately, this isn't a dream.
Risa's eyes searched for Ai, and found her slumped on the floor, hugging herself as she sob. She'd been calming herself for some quite time now, like she had always been as the leader, the elder one. And that strong image shattered, tonight, a helpless Ai to bare. Risa soften, realizing that she, herself too, was stoning her own fear. Hardening herself to be brave.
But she doesn't need to be brave. It is still Ai, her bestfriend, the girl she admires, the girl she laughed with, the girl she leaned on.. and nothing changed about that. Now, it is Ai who needs her, and she has to be there for her no matter what. Biting her lip, Risa slowly walked over to Ai. As she shrunk into a kneel, her tears flowed along.
"I'm dead, Risa-chan." Ai looking up to Risa. Her face is fair light, her normal complexion faded. It is tainted with tears, which seems to sparkle like diamonds once in awhile. Her eyes expresses anguish, yet her orbs were dark, pale and nothing.. like lifeless...
For a moment it caught Risa, until Ai spoke once again, terrified. "I was there. I saw them try to pull me out of the horrible-looking car. My arm was.. I was.." Her voice slowly drop. "It was scary, Risa. I'm scared..."
"I'm here, Ai-chan." Risa said softly, hoping it is enough to be reassuring. "You don't have to be scared. I'm here."
Ai just stared back at Risa's brown orbs, her eyes full of bright life. Risa continued, "I don't know what's happening, what you gotten yourself into... but we'll get to the bottom of this, k? We'll work on this." Risa reached for Ai's pale hand, intending to hold it for assurance, but instead her hands dipped into coldness, like dipping into a bucket of ice. She flinched at the sudden temperature drop and wasn't able to stop herself from muttering. "Oh--wow."
"I'm sorry about that." Ai mumbled lowly.
Feeling like she offended Ai unintentionally, Risa just shrug. "I don't care if you're a ghost or what," She was surprised how blunt she sounded as she let her honest feelings talk. "You're here, and I should be happy. I'm happy, Ai-chan."
Silence flooded once again. But only shortly. Ai finally smiled, her face washed by Risa's sincerity. "I'm happy too, Risa-chan. I'm happy.."
Knowing the fact they can't hug each other like the old times, the two only continued staring at each other, smiling and occasionally giggling to each other. Risa doesn't really know what's happening, or what she should do. All she knows, she'd always be by Ai-chan side and she's grateful to be with her even until now.
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Was that short? I'm sorry ^^;
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First! Wow that's rare lol
Yeah it's short. But at least it's an update :lol: Sweet TakaGaki moments there :deco:
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Man, I didn't even know I was signed in? XD
Yes this was rather short but it's ok. Like badsaints said, an update is better than none. So thank you for this. And I was in a sucky mood but AiGaki, no matter how little made me feel better. I wish they could've hugged though. Ai must feel so helpless and vulnerable now. Oh Risa, please help her *cries*
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I was right??? :?
Well, let's hope it ends up better for Risa than it did for the friend of Yanagihara Hiromi, Kobayashi Azusa.
I am enjoying your story so far. Go TakaGaki! :yossi:
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Well that's true, it isn't possible to write a TakaGaki without.. anykind of action :lol: I trust you :thumbsup
Liked this chapter quite much :yep: Poor Ai-chan, she must be even more confused about the whole situation than Risa is :( I love caring Risa-chan, she's so kind and sweet! It's good that they have each others :wub:
Great job! :cow:
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I believe we need some magic?? :gmon witch: What's TakaGaki if there's no touching? XD (Sorry, that's just me complaining again.. :nervous)
Aww~ That was really sweet. :heart: Gaki didn't mind a dead Ai-chan. :)
Me likes this! :twothumbs
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I was right, Risa did end up comforting Ai :lol: Now they just have to figure out what's going on, right?
Was that short? I'm sorry ^^;
:lol: Funny, you don't sound very sorry. :lol:
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So Ai knows that she's dead, infact she even watched herself pulled from the wreckage of the chrah but yet she is still in this world, I wonder if perhaps thier is a reason for that, maybe even something that involves Gaki perhaps, is thier a way to bring Ai back?
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whooottss~ a week break!
i was busy few days ago... only few days ago... XD
the rest, i was just spamming my eyes with morning musume. learned a lot :cow:
and reading a lot of pervy fics... yay~! i feel like busted. haha
saa, saa, no reply for now ^^; gomene ;)
Chappie-- oh what chapter are we again..?
Chappie 4!
So you already know. Like a soft whisper along the breeze.
Ai can feel her presence materializing somewhere by the end of the bed, but paid no heed. She watched Risa's chest heave gently, as she breath life on her slumber.
"I do." She audibly replied, though she knows that they can both communicate without it. At least they do. She recounted once again everything that happened, "Makes sense."
"I'm sorry about that."
She silently sighed to herself. Reaching for the sleeping form's face with a hope of at least wipe away the troubled features drawn on her face, she felt drawing away her hands when Risa shuddered at the slight contact. Instead, she barely brushed her hair, just like a gentle blow sweeping across Risa's hair ends. "That makes us the same, Yanagihara-senpai."
The girl hummed upon the recognition, taking her place a step behind Ai. "You're quite lucky to have her."
Yeah.. isn't it. She felt herself grin a little.
"Usually, no one longer sense us, we entities left astray in this world. Helpless." Ai glanced, but instead the mirror past the girl caught her her attention. They held no reflection on it. "We no longer belong in this world."
No longer I belong in this world.
Still, she can see Risa on it. Somehow, seeing her helped her register the words calmly.
Then why I'm still here.
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Risa rolled over, finding herself awake. Surprisingly, no noisy alarm clock set her stumbling off the bed. The atmosphere seems silent and peaceful, yet it feels no different than her usual mornings. She sat up, stretching her arms upward with a loud yawn. Something smells.. good, she stinks. She wondered what she did, but found herself too lazy to think about it. She badly needs to takes a bath. She jumped of the bed and paced to bathroom.
After some moments or longer, she came out of the bathroom, refreshed. She walked across her room to reach for her closet.
"OHAYO GOZAIMAS!!!"
"WAAHH!"
The loud greeting made Risa jump off her feet and found herself staring at the mirror. She found a Takahashi Ai staring down on her with a big grin. "Eh?" Risa slowly stood-up. "Ai-chan? What ya doing on the mirror? Wait-- what, mirror...?"
She stared at grinning Ai on the mirror with such confusion. Something doesn't fit. Something REALLY.. doesn't fit. Her memories started playing- The UFA building. The fellow members, Tsunku. Takahashi Ai is dead.
"WAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!!!"
Once again, Risa fell down to the floor, shocked and hardly pressed against the bed. Ai's bright smile was replaced with worry, "Risa!" She bent down, yet still remaining on the mirror. "Are you ok?"
"Y-you!"
"I? me?"
Risa remembered last night. Yeah, they already talked about it. Her expression dropped to calmness as realization slowly hugged her. "You're dead."
An awkward silence prevailed for a moment, before Ai broke into a chuckle. "Well, I am! Something wrong about that?"
Hehe. 'Something wrong about that'.
"I'm just.. not used to it." Risa once again rose to her feet. "So.. so, you can get to mirrors now?"
Ai's face brighten, her expression growing into something like an excited kid. "Isn't it awesome? I can actually be in mirrors!"
Oh gawd, I can totally scare off the members out of their wits in rehearsal rooms, Risa thought she saw Ai's dark eyes glint mischievously in a blink. Deciding it was just her imagination, or just can't imagine Ai actually thinking that way, she just shrugged it off.
"Look, "Ai continued. "If I stepped out of this mirror, I'll have no reflection." With that, Ai indeed stepped out of the flat mirror and left Risa's lone reflection on it. Risa's eyes turned as wide as saucers once again.
"WAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!"
"Wha~! I'm sorry for doing that, I didn't know that will scare you--- uh, wow." Ai's grin turned into a smirk.
"Why you haven't told me that I'm naked!" Risa complained, as she bent awkwardly in attempt to hide her bare self. Her left arm gathering her pair of breasts which are big for to keep her nipples from showing, and another strapped down to cover her gender, with a hip lifted up in help. Remembering that the bed is just beside her, she quickly pulled the blanket and wrapped herself with it.
"Ya know, I can still see through it--"
"Stop staring at me!"
"Uh..oh.. o-okay." Ai's mind somehow froze at the moment, scrambling in search of the right thing to do. She turned her back, and found it the best thing to do right now.
"Don't look until I say so!" Risa threatened. "And no peeking!" She darted to closet and started pulling out clothes. Ai can hear Risa fumbling as she try to dress herself in hurry. Ai silently giggled at the situation.
"Done now?"
'Waitt!" The other girl buttoned her shorts. "Ok, you can look now."
Ai turned around and saw Risa on a plain, lose shirt and shorts. She playfully eyed Risa from head to toe, intentionally pausing at some parts.
"What now?!" Risa placed her curled hands on each side of her waist.
Ai can't help but chuckle. "Well---"
Recalling what the older woman said about seeing through... "DISGUSTING, AI! You're such a pervert!!!"
"Whoaa! Don't accuse me like that!"
Risa once again tried to cover her private parts. "KIMOI!"
"Geez~ Risa. That won't help. I'm a ghost, ok? A ghost with some cool powers to be used for.. interesting stuffs.."
Risa's mouth fell open in shock, eliciting more laughter from Ai. "Cum'on, I won't take advantage of you, k? I'm just having fun."
The bean pouted, very cutely that Ai wished she could pinch her cheeks the usual way. She just smiled at her lightly, that soon drew out a grin from the other. Suddenly, a ring sounded.
"Oh wait." Risa looked for her phone, later on finding it under her pillow. Her hold tightened, as it's little screen flashed text from 'Eri'.
"What is it about?"
Risa returned once again the gaze from expecting eyes. "A meeting, Ai. Concerning your burial."
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I hope you don't mind how plain my sentences were, and errors ^^;
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XD Ai having fun with her ghostly powers. Able to see through clothes? :lol: Hell yeah! XD But, oh, it got serious there at the end.
BTW, Yanagihara Hiromi, right? The Country Musume that died in a car crash?
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New TAKAGAKI story *________*
:bow:
Been following from the start, sorry for not commenting earlier. :kneelbow: But really happy to see you out with a fic, aya-chii. Good stuff so far too! :thumbsup
So I was thinking that this would be a rather somber, angsty kind of story with the first few chapters, but I'm beginning to wonder now if this is turning out to be a light-hearted, romcom or something :lol: The transition from sad to fun was a bit abrupt and left me reeling somewhat, but that can be forgiven just because the latest chapter is cuuute! :wub: And well. TakaGaki. That alone is good enough to forgive almost anything. :heart:
But hmmmm. All thismakes me wonder. What's the plot going to be? Simply to figure out why Ai-chan is still lingering around? I reckon she's got unfinished business with Gaki-san (and we all know what this business is :grin: hahahaa...).
I'm looking forward to seeing what's going to happen when the others hear about (or see for themselves - which is another question, is Gaki-san the only one who can see her?) ghost!Ai-chan. Maybe it can become a whole Momusu adventure to get to the root of the problem! :w00t:
Something smells.. good, she stinks
I stinks this is an error. XD But it was too cute, had to quote.
"Ya know, I can still see through it--"
I didn't know ghosts had such cool powers! :shocked: Now Ai-chan can enter the UFA building and just... enjoy. Oh. :bleed eyes:
Risa's mouth fell open in shock, eliciting more laughter from Ai. "Cum'on, I won't take advantage of you, k? I'm just having fun."
WOW. :stunned: I'm having a hard time believing that Ai-chan isn't more worried about her current ghost state. Lols. So, she's is a bit of a cheeky one in this, huh? I'm looking forward to all her future teasing then, and Risa's future floundering. :P
Lastly, I'm really enjoying your writing. There are a few grammatical errors and stuff to overlook (be careful with your tenses, they're pretty messy :nervous for example, if you're going to write in past tense, keep your writing past tense and don't switch to present tense. You keep switching from one to the other, and while it's not distracting, it's really noticeable. Tenses are quite possibly the most difficult thing about English though, so no fretting if you can't get it right :twothumbs). But overall, I really like the style and the pacing of your writing - it really does lend to the atmosphere and enhances all the feelings you're trying to convey. Good job with the story in this respect! :k-wink:
OKAY. So let's see what'll happen in the next chapter, now that they have to talk about Ai's burial at a meeting. Hopefully Ai will take this a bit more seriously (although I wonder how she'd do that in a room full of Musumes with that perv-vision of hers. XD).
Thanks for sharing this story, and for the latest chapter! :love:
Looking forward to the next update! :thumbsup
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Ai-chan is such a meanie :lol: Wonder if the others can see her? :? Waiting for the next chappie :P
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LOL! Ai-chan! :lol: Always teasing Gaki like that. :D Gave me a good laugh! XD
But hey! Is it a good idea to let Ai-chan roam around seeing through people's clothes? :roll: XD
Why do I get the feeling that other members might not see her? :( I want them to see her... So they won't think that Gaki is going crazy or something. :wth
But most importantly, someone should just revive her already! :P :grin:
Thank you for the update! :twothumbs **awaits**
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Will Ai-chan be able to see the 6th generation nine audition finalist (the one that only shows up in mirror reflections in the Bijo Gaku special)?
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So A i has a mentor of sort's in this Yanagihara person, a sort of spirit guide for her, though it's intresting too see that the tell Ai that usually spirits can't be seen, I wonder why Gaki can then, is it to do with the 'purpose' that Ai has to do before she moves on?
Seems as, er, bigger things on her mind at the moment though, poor Gaki, you know I think she'd rather not know that Ai, can, well, see through certain things (even if perhaps she can't)
Man, talk about a downer, having your little tease with Eri interrupted by details about your owb funeral..... :doh:
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Ai-chan is dead :O...damn! :banghead:
this sentence don't like on nothing ... :smhid
but this history is strange and have mistery ...
i can't say "this FF is bad" because is a big lie :thumbdown:
I like your FF :twothumbs
I think...this is the first time that i say " i like one FF where Ai-chan is dead" XD! :yep:
good chapter :thumbsup
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Usually when people get done with showers, they still have the towel around them :lol:...
I guess not in this fic !
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WHOOOTTS~ how'cha doin? really sorry for updating this late.
rndmnweird: whahaha. yeah, that would be fun. i wonder why i let ai have that ability anyways.. but then :D let her still have fun even though she's dead .
beecubed: THANKS~! really! i really appreciate you commenting. thanks for your comments and corrections, i'll try to work on that ^^
bamtai: well here's the chapter! we'll see what we can do for ai-chan's visibility. i dunno really what i might do in future chapters
kano-chan: LOL isn't it great to let her see through clothes XD maybe we shall add more fun ghost abilities
resop2: oowww~ sorry. i updated this so lat that i can't respond to that answer anymore ^^; really sorry
gab98: thanks a lot gab! hahahaha. quite unusual though, writing a fic where ai-chan is dead... i hope you'll still continue reading this
xyukie56:sorry for bein' random... i wasn't really aware of that. (i kinda walk around without towel sometimes BUT IN MY OWN ROOM) hahahahaha
and yeah.. ai-chan will graduate soon eh?
And Niigaki Risa became the leader of all-female idol group, Morning Musume.
After the burial ceremony, official announcement s was made to the media by Tsunku. Things were happening way too fast, and it seemed even the members can’t cope-up with it. Just dealing the with fact that their former leader Takahashi Ai is now dead, made the deafening silence yell with mourning and grief every time they gather up.
How much more with Ai herself, as Risa thought of the entity only she can see.
Chapter 5
She was a great woman…
I admire her a lot…
Her perseverance and…
I can’t believe it, no one knew…
“Ai.” The girl sitting on the stairs lifted her head up. “Aren’t you going inside?”
Little she shook her head, a sad smile slightly drawn in her lips. “No,” was she said in almost a whisper and a grin was perhaps forced to be shown. “The incense irritates me a lot.”
Risa sat next to her. “They’re already speaking…”
“Yeah. I can hear them.”
“Your mother and…”
“Niigaki-san.”
Yet someone else spoke at the same time as Ai tried to mutter her acquaintance’s name, a living one. Risa turned to register the one who’s calling her, “Tanaka-san.”
“Be ready.”
Ai realized that it is actually her first time seeing a fellow member besides Risa. Tanaka Reina. Tough you thought, hailing from her yankii title, yet looked just as disoriented as anybody else would. She didn’t forget to live-up in her fashion and cosmetics, yet it failed to conceal the dark hollows beneath her eyes. She looks just as tired and sleepless, staring blankly down to the floor. While Junjun…
There was Junjun behind Reina, and it shocked her that she’s looking directly to her direction. Staring at the place where she is, no other expression was exposed, but her eyes hinted there’s something… Somehow, a fear grew inside her.
“Junjun?” The tall Chinese tore her gaze away from the invisible being as Risa acknowledged her presence.
“I’m worried about Tanaka-san.”
No more response was made against the statement, and Risa spoke-up. “I’ll be coming.”
Reina just walked back inside as she took their now leader’s word. Before Junjun followed, she eyed Risa intently for a short moment. When they’re gone, she looked back at the silent girl beside her.
“Junjun was looking at—"
Predicting what she’ll say next, Risa interrupted her sentence quickly. “Silly~ she can’t see you.”
“But…” She stared back at Risa with a worried expression.
“If she can, there’s still nothing to be scared about. It’s Junjun.”
Ai’s tensed expression slowly toned down as the words sunk in. Yeah, it’s Junjun… “We’ll, I mean ‘I’ err… well if she can see, then ‘We’ will talk to her, okay?”
The older woman smiled at her, and the bean smiled back. “I’m going now. You really aren’t coming?”
The smile fainted a bit. “I’ll be fine here.”
Risa nervously stood before the microphone as she was called to speak in behalf of Morning Musume. Her gaze explored the faces that are all staring at her, some of the eyes puffed and some are just expressionless.
“Uhmm… Good day to all of you.”
That just sounded so wrong when their just having a funeral for a deceased person, and Ai can’t help but giggle. Not that someone else will mind her…
Realizing improper use of words, Risa inhaled deeply. “I’m Niigaki Risa, a fellow member of Morning Musume. Me and Ai-chan joined together being in one generation, and I’ve been friends with her ever since then.”
Risa bit her lip. Just when you’re obviously unprepared for this even you were reminded beforehand…
“I… we… well… We all know Ai-chan. Everyone who had speak before me told you who she is, how amazing she is. She stood-up as a leader for this past 4 years, and even though the responsibility seemed beyond her limitations, she faced it with all her best, widen the scope of her capabilities and abilities, and exceeded her boundaries to fit the leader everyone expected to be, and to be the leader that guided Morning Musume through anything they faced. In troubles or success.”
And I’m totally messing-up.
“I was there with her. I’ve seen the struggles she had, but responsibly kept from everyone’s knowledge as much not to troubles them with her own matters. Even though she herself isn’t sure of how to deal with things, she only thought of others first and what’s the best for them, thus overcoming the problems we had. With her lead, we’ve became closer than we’ve ever been. Unconsciously, we’re already treating one another like family.”
Mou~ Niigaki-san… don’t make me cry…
“And now I’ve taken-up the responsibility to become the next leader as she unexpectedly… left us, I’ll continue where she last stepped and take care of this group as she have done. We’ll never forget all the things she have done for this group, no matter how many generation will still come, the name of Takahashi Ai will always be remembered as long Morning Musume lives, and of course this group will stay existing forever.”
Small laughs were elicited from the softly sobbing audience. Even Risa herself felt herself tearing-up.
“Ai-chan, I know you can hear me… I want to tell you, I’m sorry. For everything. Whatever we are dealing right now, we’ll get through it, ok? No matter how complicated it is, I’m here, the group is here. Though they don’t know, you know they’re always there for you, right?”
Confused expressions surfaced as the last sentence was said but nevertheless, they softly and briefly laugh at the concluded joke.
“Niigaki-san is sure speaking weird.” Linlin said, smiling, as she wiped the tears from her eyes.
“She still needs to learn how to do jokes a lot more convincing.” Aika softly giggled and sniffed.
“We’ll continue to do our best as Morning Musume, as a group, as a family. Thanks to all of your hardworks. Otsukaresamadeshita.”
Ai found herself inside, watching her group huddle together. Teary was it, yet the smiles on their faces assured brighter hopes for the coming days, for the future without her.
The brown eyes glossed with tears met hers, and a smile was shared between them. The only two of them.
Yes, accept the fact and move on with a new hope.
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I guess this is the end of the mourning period. I hope I’ll be able to write brighter chaps from now on :)