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Title: Untitled fic (AtsuMina) - COMPLETED
Post by: whiningwillow on December 10, 2012, 06:08:03 PM
I'm a newbie here in jphip and i really wanted to share what I've written so far. Please read my fics and I hope you enjoy :)

Chapter 1
Name's Takahashi Minami, your average girl with twintails hanging on both sides of my head. Nothing special about me; you could say that my life is nothing special too. Born in an average family, living in the projects since birth. Sadly, i was not blessed with a height like a normal girl wants, can you believe it?! Im just 4'11. 18, barely legal but who cares, there's nothing much to do.

I study in this school named "wings of the future" name's too fancy for a school without any recognition at all.
"The youth is the future. You are the wings that will waver blah blah blah.." the usual shit that the principal kept repeating all over the years. I guess I need to bear all of this until I graduate and start looking for a job that will sustain myself, or luckily my family (saying that i'll have one which will never happen) until i die peacefully and turn into nutrients that earthly beings will enjoy and share with each other.

*shalala suteki ni kiss~ shalala sunao de kiss~*
I grabbed the goddammed phone and swiped my thumb across the smooth touch screen.

"6:30 AM alarm"

"Nee minami, your dad and i wont be home tonight. Were going somewhere. But everything that you need for tomorrow are ready."
I continue on eating my breakfast. I dont want to question where they'll be going since i know that they'll be just somewhere enjoying the time of their lives.

"Im off mom"

I grabbed my things and went out the door. I ride my bicycle off to school everyday. Its pretty much convenient for a lazy gal like me. Long walks are boring, way too boring.

"Faster ms.takahashi, before i close the gate" the guardian of the heaven's gate shouted at me. That PE teacher is way too creepy. He looks like someone out of a
hentai movie.

I opened my locker. I grabbed my slippers and changed. As i return my shoes, i noticed a white envelope lying there.
"i wonder who gave this" i said to myself.
I teared the v-shaped flop with my nails and pulled out the yellow paper inside. The letter reads:

"fountain 4pm today.."

This is the first time i received something like this. What does it mean? Prank? Project? Or worst, confession? No no no, it cant be a confession since Im in a exclusive girls school. What am I thinking. Better get to class.

"Takamina-chan!" I heard a shout behind me as I walk towards my classroom.
"Hey Oshima-san.."
"Are you free tomorrow? Mom's having her 40th birthday. Please please pretty pleaaase"
Im not good at parties since Im a home kind of person.
"Uhm..Im not so sure about that Oshima-san. My parents are away and Im left alone at home"
"Please..for a friend?" she gave me that reassuring smile.
"Okay okay, but I wont stay up late. Ok?"
"Yey! I sooooooo love you Takamina-chan" she gave me a tight hug. Her chest is pressing against me, how I envy her; She's 5ft tall yet she is well endowed.
"See you tomorrow! I'll text you the details later" and she went off.
I answered with a nod.

The letter I got earlier still bothers me. I wonder what could it be? Who could be the sender?
*thud* A chalk hit my forehead..
"Ack! Who did tha.."
"Bullseye! Ms.Takahashi! Stop daydreaming. Read the first paragraph on page 18"
"Im sorry Yamamoto-sensei.."

*School bell sounded*

Dismissal time, everyone left the room one by one. Fountain fountain fountain, it kept repeating inside my head. Anxiety grows as I was nearing the fountain. I looked at my watch, its 3:50PM. The fountain in the school grounds looks deserted.

"No ones there. A prank I guess" I said to myself with dismay
There's a girl. She was blocked from my view since she was covered by the fountain. She has short straight hair and she got a nice figure judging by the shape of her back.
"Are you by any chance the sender of the mail?" I asked the girl.
She turned her back revealing her mysterious presence. Its..its Maeda Atsuko-san the school's top student. She hastily bowed. She..she's my idol, everyone's idol to be exact.
"Hey hey, what are you doing Maeda-san"
"Sorry for dragging you all the way here. Uhm, can we talk somewhere more private?" she asked.
"Sure sure. Its not like Im in a hurry or something"

She grabbed my hand and we went to the school's home economics room which is only across the fountain. Her hand is trembling and my heart is beating fast, this is awkward.
"What do you want to talk abou.."
Her lips touched mine. Her arms wrapped around me. Her embrace tightens as I answer her long deep kisses. I cant move, my head is going blank. My lips are moving on their own. Her hands wandered around my lower half which I answered with deep faint moans.
"Maeda-san..wait.." she stopped with her advances. "It's my first kiss.."
She looked into my eyes as if staring deep into my soul. She didnt answer, we remained motionless.
"Did..."
"Shhhhh.." she placed her finger on my lips refraining me from uttering any words. "I like you Takahashi-san.. I..Im sorry for doing this so suddenly..for taking your first kiss.. I.."
I immediately placed my finger onto her lips.
"Shhhhhh..I like you too Maeda-san"

(`_´)ゞ 高橋みなみ X 前田敦

Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic)
Post by: XxRoByNxX78 on December 10, 2012, 07:00:48 PM
its really interesting and a early confession update soon i want to read more  :)

oh and welcome  :welcome
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic)
Post by: miayaka on December 10, 2012, 07:25:28 PM
Welcome  :jphip:

And I'm  happy that your first post is atsumina   :on gay:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic)
Post by: TakaminaBG on December 10, 2012, 07:36:47 PM
 :welcome
More AtsuMina!!!! Me GUSTA!!
This is really interesting, I want more kisses!!  :hiakhiakhiak:
Please update SOON!!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic)
Post by: kahem on December 11, 2012, 12:46:11 AM
Simple but great thanx ^^
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic)
Post by: whiningwillow on December 11, 2012, 04:24:03 AM
Thanks guys :) i'll update this soon :)
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic)
Post by: Haruko on December 11, 2012, 04:54:26 AM
wow that was fast....
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 2
Post by: whiningwillow on December 11, 2012, 02:16:23 PM
Chapter 2
I pinched myself thinking everything was just a dream. I really dont have any attraction to the same sex but it was really different. It was special. I.. I felt like I was shackled by something out of my control. I didnt even fight back. Spur of the moment? no no no, it is as if I am feeling something I dont even know. The way she pinned me against the wall, her tight embrace, her smooth and delicate touches, they're full of emotions. An inxperienced girl like me doesnt deserve that.

I was awakened by the sound of a girl's voice. She was humming a famillar tune, a song by a group named Warota 7, my alarm in every morning of my life, Valentine Kiss.

"Breakfast in bed. I hope you like it" Maeda-san prepared the small table on my lap.
"Ehhhh??! You shouldn't have. I should be the one cooking" The presentation of the food is perfect. The taste? perfect. As expected of the best student in the school.
"Say ahhhhhh.."

After all the fuss we made inside the home economics room yesterday, I decided that we should continue in a more secluded and private place, that's how she ended up here. She called her parents telling a lame excuse that an emergency project-making came up and staying over is unavoidable. Wonderful wonderful lie. Admit it, we need to lie sometimes.

"Ano, Maeda-san, I'll be attending Oshima-san's mother's birthday party later. I wonder if you can tag along" I pulled out my phone prompting to text if my "special" friend can tag along. "I'll just drop by and say my regards"
She went around me and wrapped her arms from behind.
"Why dont we just stay here and do the "project" I told my mom about.." she whispered with a smooth touch on the middle of my lip
Oh god, why does she have to do that? Darn it, why does it have to be so tempting. Keep calm Minami, keep calm, you already promised to Oshima-san. You need to go.
"Uhm, can we just go there for just a little while, please? Then we can.."
She interrupted with a kiss on my nape which send shivers down my spine.
"..then we can have some more private time together, Mi-na-mi.." she smothered my shoulders with smooth and soft kisses. "I'll go get dressed, but better keep your visit short."
"I will.."

It's 12 in the afternoon when we arrived at Oshima-san's home, mansion to be exact. Loud music, lavish decors, busy guests, grand dresses and stuff, I think we got into the wrong place.
"Let's go back now Maeda-san.." I despised the way I look. My dress is like something out of the void. "This is..not my kind of thing"
"It doesn't matter Minami. Let's just get this over with, okay?" she gave me a smile and we proceeded inside. "And please, no more formalities. Atsuko would do"

An old man welcomed us at the front gigantic door of the mansion, I think he's the butler of the family. I've seen him before but I cant remember where and when.
"Welcome ladies, friends of Yuko-sama?" he asked in a low deep voice.
"Yes, we are her friends. Can we ask where could she be?"
Oshima-san suddenly descended the grand staircases that are so shiny that the image of my horrible dress is reflected.
"Takamina-chan!" she hugged me, like what she always do. "Im so glad that you came."
"Goodmorning Oshima-san" Acchan greeted the always-energetic Oshima-san. "I hope that you wouldn't mind me coming here"
"EHHHHHHHHHHHH????!!!!!! Ma..Maeda-san?!!"
Oshima-san pulled me suddenly on the corner.
"How did you managed to bring Maeda-san here? And why you didn't tell me about this?" she asked in a very low voice.
"Long story Oshima-san, loooooong story. I'll tell you the details next time."
"Grrrrrrrrrr..I could've prepared better. You'll pay for this Takamina-chan" she threatened
"Ehhhhhhhhhhh??!!!" I gasped. Oh god, let this be a joke.
Acchan tapped our shoulders.
"Is there a problem?" Acchan asked.
"No no no no..there's no problem Maeda-san" Oshima-san is trembling. She was shocked for sure.

The hallways are filled with heirlooms and other stuffs. Picture filled the walls, various expensive objects graced the table tops. Oshima-san talked about these things while walking across the hallway. I wonder how they could afford these kind of things. On the far end of the hallway hangs a gigantic painting, a very nice painting, Oshima-san and her family.
"Wonderful! Nee Oshima-san, how old are you in that painting?" I asked
"I was 10 that time. How I miss to be young"
We stopped in front of a room.
"It's mom's room. Party's gonna start at 1, and since both of you are early, why dont you two have a chat with her" Oshima-san suggested.

We left at 12:30PM. Time with Oshima-san's mom is fun, even Acchan had fun. We talked about lots of useless stuff under the sun.
"Want to go somewhere else Minami? Its still early" Acchan held my hand while walking towards down the street. Thinking of it, Im much of a home-kind of person, going out isnt my thing.
"I dunno, I dont know much about places around here. Plus, look at me I look horrible in this dress. Better go home and change" I've been thinking about being alone with Acchan. I just want to sit at home.
"I want to go out on a date" Acchan suddenly uttered out of the blue. "With you Minami.."
I didn't answer. My heart is beating fast. My hand started shaking without apparent reason.
"It's okay if its not today Minami. I just want to tell you so. Besides.."
I interrupted her with a kiss on her cheek.
"Take me out sometime.." I wrapped my arms around her waist and kissed her lips in the middle of the busy street. I really dont give a damn if someone sees us.
"I love you Minami.." she whispered
"I love you too.."

On the far end of the street, I saw someone behind the post as if watching us the whole time. It's Tomomi Itano..

Σ( ̄。 ̄ノ)ノ 高橋みなみ X 前田敦
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 2
Post by: bimbo on December 11, 2012, 02:59:55 PM
OH MY GOD IT IS SO ADDICTIVE!  :wriggly:

Even though the 'Atsumina' progress is pretty fast  :sweat:

I WANT MORE KISSES!!  :nya:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 2
Post by: TakaminaBG on December 11, 2012, 03:08:00 PM
Wait I got confused... Did they do.. you know what?!?!
They are so cute!!!!!
Hm.. here she is the great Itano Tomomi!!
Please update SOON!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 2
Post by: whiningwillow on December 11, 2012, 04:54:40 PM
OH MY GOD IT IS SO ADDICTIVE!  :wriggly:

Even though the 'Atsumina' progress is pretty fast  :sweat:

I WANT MORE KISSES!!  :nya:

Wait I got confused... Did they do.. you know what?!?!
They are so cute!!!!!
Hm.. here she is the great Itano Tomomi!!
Please update SOON!


i will :))
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 2
Post by: miayaka on December 11, 2012, 05:12:26 PM
waw this is so fast!

Quote
On the far end of the street, I saw someone behind the post as if watching us the whole time. It's Tomomi Itano..

im interested on the next part!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 2
Post by: XxRoByNxX78 on December 11, 2012, 05:33:46 PM
great update why is tomomi there does she love takamidget ot atsuko
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 2
Post by: stepk on December 12, 2012, 02:01:01 AM
Tomomi is  spy   XD

I like the history, acchan so cute 

Waiting the next chapter.   :twothumbs
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 2
Post by: Haruko on December 12, 2012, 05:08:27 AM
Wait I got confused... Did they do.. you know what?!?!
They are so cute!!!!!
Hm.. here she is the great Itano Tomomi!!
Please update SOON!

yeah!! but i wanna know how maeda fall in love with our takaboy...
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 2
Post by: whiningwillow on December 12, 2012, 05:17:58 AM
will update in  a while :)) thanks for the support guys

 :thumbup :thumbup :thumbup :thumbup
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 3
Post by: whiningwillow on December 12, 2012, 02:01:50 PM
Chapter 3

Mom's not coming back tonight, I guess they'll be extending their 'private' time together. I wonder if they already forgot that they have a daughter. I'm so glad that Acchan keep me company. I looked at her across the table, looking at her beauty and her warm delicate smile. Passing time wasn't so hard when you have someone doing the same like you.

"Do you want to stay at home tonight?" she asked. "You're parents aren't coming tonight right?"
"Ah, yeah..Is it okay with you? Are your parents will be okay at the idea?"
She yanked her phone out of her pocket.
"Im gonna email mom, but I think that she'll be okay with you coming over." she started typing with her phone with super speed. Things sure develop fast, it just started yesterday.
"Mom's okay with it Minami. Just pack a few things and lets go."
I hurried to my room and started packing my things. Im pretty much excited if
you're gonna ask me.

Tomochin is a friend of mine. She's kind of tomboyish and she dresses like a boy when were kids. We used to hang out together when we're in middle school. I used to go to her place to play with her. As we grow up, we seldom see each other, I wonder what happened to her. She's from another section and she's a classmate of Oshima-san. With her seeing us, it really bugs me.

Acchan's mom welcomed us upon arriving at their residence. She's a warm and delicate woman. She looks so caring and motherly. Acchan's very much like her, no wonder. Acchan does not have any siblings; an only child, like me.

As I gazed upon the pictures over the table tops, its like Im looking through Acchan's life. At the far left, you can see baby Acchan, soooooo cute. As you go right, you can see her growing. There's a pictured labeled 'Acchan's first bicycle ride', you can see her riding a red bicycle on the street, I think she's around 5 at the picture. On the far right, its her picture winning the nationals.

"Let's eat Minami." she grabbed my hand and we went to the dining room. I was surprised by the food on the table, it's like a feast and it looks amazing. I remembered the breakfast Acchan prepared earlier in the morning, its very much like this. We give thanks to the heavens for the bountiful blessings.
"Itadakimasu!"

*Viva hurricane Kanjou no uzu ni sarawareru boku ga iru  ♪~*

I excused myself to answer my phone. Its a random number. I wonder who's calling me.
"Hello? Takahashi Minami here..uhm who is this?"
"Nee Minami, its mom" oh its mom of all the people "How are you doing right now?"
"Im fine mom..Im in middle of dinner, can you call later?"
"No, its okay Minami. Im just checking you out. We'll be coming home tomorrow. Sorry Minami. Take care oand goodnight" beep beep. Mom just hang all of the sudden, as expected of my great mom. I stopped caring long ago, they could do what they want as long they fulfill their parental duties.

"Who is it Minami? You look troubled" Acchan suddenly sprung at my back. I hugged her as if there's something inside of me calling out to something that is lacking in my life, a cub seeking the care of her mom. How f****d it is? I cant explain.
"Im okay.." I uttered. As if everything's okay. Look at me, I look miserable at your arms. Tears suddenly fall from these goddamned eyes.
"Lets go to my room" her hug tightened "Dont cry. Look at you, you look like an old lady"
I gave a small smile, not really a smile but an indication that she made me happy
for being there, comforting me.

She's brushing my back with towel with a flower pattern on it. We're clumped together inside the tub filled with warm water with my back against her.
"Nee, why me Acchan?" I asked. No response from her. She continued on rubbing my back.
"A girl, below average, short, introvert, weak, frail.." I continued "..you can go for boys, Im sure everyone will like you"
Acchan started singing in a low tone..a song from Gackt.

~~We can keep walking forever
Together, now and forever
This love I clutch close to my heart
Will never change, this one unique
“I love you”~~

In love, you dont question things. Why do you like her? Is it because she's nice and pretty? Remove the nice and pretty, will you still love her?  A well-known person once said “It's much better to say that you love the person because of an unexplainable reason, a reason that is like finding a needle in a haystack.” And I'm starting to believe her.

"When we were still kids Minami, you might not remember, you're the only one who played with me in the sandbox. We're complete strangers, yet you approached me. You said 'Why are you alone? Let's play together' Ever Since that day I tried to remember you. 'My name is Minami. Let's be friends' you said that too, but I forgot to introduce myself. Then your mom carried you away saying that you should be going now. There came middle school, I transferred to Wings of The Future, I was hoping that you were also studying there. Then my hopes are answered, you are studying there. I was scared approaching you because you might not remember me, so I did my best to go up the ranks; tried my best to be the ace, so you might recognize me, but you didnt remember. I've waited until high school, until yesterday. I took the courage to talk to you, but my feelings went on an outrage. I couldn't contain it, then I kissed you" Acchan recounted.

((((;゚Д゚))))))) 高橋みなみ X 前田敦
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 3
Post by: TakaminaBG on December 12, 2012, 02:21:48 PM
No kisses!?!  :cry:
Please update soon SOON!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 3
Post by: stepk on December 12, 2012, 04:07:35 PM
cute history   :inlove:

I like it, please update    :thumbsup
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 3
Post by: miayaka on December 12, 2012, 07:05:42 PM
You update so fast!!
I like you!!

Quote
~~We can keep walking forever
Together, now and forever
This love I clutch close to my heart
Will never change, this one unique
“I love you”~~

my fave scene~
looking forward for the next chapter!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 3
Post by: kahem on December 13, 2012, 01:09:44 AM
wow Acchan is brave
I wonder which role Tomochin will play here
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 3
Post by: whiningwillow on December 13, 2012, 05:37:29 AM
thanks for the support again guys..i'll be updating in 30mins. :)
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 3
Post by: Haruko on December 13, 2012, 05:46:44 AM
No kisses!?!  :cry:
Please update soon SOON!!

jajaj everybody wants atsumina kiss.. but it ok We need to know how acchanfall in love..
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 3
Post by: whiningwillow on December 13, 2012, 06:27:55 AM
Chapter 4

If I was a bird, I would fly to the distance. Fly to a place where no one could see me, but the sky and the sea. I would forget everything, leave everything. Fly until my wings give out. I would fall to sea and die drowning..down down down doooown..

"Uwaaaaaaaaaaa!" I gasp for breath. Im breathing heavily. A nightmare, it's as if im drowning for real.
I look at the clock, it says 5:50AM. Its been 5 days since we started our relationship, and things are going quite well. We usually hang out together after class, its either in her house or mine, and.. we usually.. nevermind.

Today's another normal day, nothing special and nothing in particular.

*beep beep*
Ah, I just recieved a text from Acchan.

    -I cant come with you today Minami. I have some things to attend to today. Please go ahead of me, I'll make it up to you tomorrow I promise-

I guess I need to go home alone today.

"Minamiiiiiiiiii!" its Oshima-san. She looks energetic as always. She runs towards me
"Hey Oshima-san, how are you?" she looks exhausted from that running.
"Ano, do you want to hang out together tomorrow? We dont have any class anyways" She asked "You can bring Maeda-san along. You look so close to each other eh. Is there something between you two?"
"Ehhhhhhhhh???!!! No no no, there's nothing between us. Plus uhmmmmm..she's just my tutor" my heart starts beating fast. Shit, that's just a lame excuse I made. What to do? What to do? Waaaaa!
"And you're just blushing right now hahaha" Oshima-san gave a evil grin on her face. "So you're an L nee, Minami hahaha"
"Ehhhhhhhhh?!!!!! No no..what are you saying Oshima-san. Stop!" I turned, hiding the redness of my face. I can just tell anyone about us, Acchan help me!
Oshima-san continued laughing, argh why does she have to be like that? Hmmmmmp.
"See you tomorrow Minami!" she ran towards the opposite direction. "Bring Maeda-san along!"

I feel as if someone is following as soon as I left the school's 'Heaven's Gate', I feel so uneasy right now. I looked around hoping to find someone, but theres no one I ran towards the nearest 24/7 store to ease the tension and bought an energy drink. Yosha! Time to run!

Run! Straight ahead! Left! Right! Right! Straight! Left!
*THUD!*
I fell down hard, butt-first. Ack! I felt a sharp pain on my butt.
"Im so sorry. I wasn't looking..eh, Tomochin!?" I bumped onto my childhood friend. I grabbed her hand and helped her stand up. "Im so sorry. Soooooo sorry!"
"No worries Minami, I wasn't looking either" She dusted off her skirt with her hands. "Im sorry too"
"Ano, It's been a while since we talked to each other. How are you doing these days, Tomochin?" I asked though it looks pretty awkward in some extent.
"Pretty fine, I guess. Math is killing me right now" She said.
"Im sorry for being so sudden, but can we walk together since we live next to each other. Do you have any other places to go to?" I shamefully asked.
"I dont have any other place to go. Is something wrong?"
"Uhmmm..nothing nothing. I just thought that we should have a small talk since we didn't talk to each other for a while" I cant tell her that I feel so strange right now, because she might be creeped out.

We walked together along the narrow streets of the asphalt jungle under orange sunset.
"Quite nostalgic isn't it? When were in grade school we used to walk together like this" Tomochin recounted "I kinda miss the long walks we used to do.."
"Haha.. Me too" we recounted the past experiences that we had, everything feels like were kids.
We arrived at the front of my apartment. At last, no more stalker feeling.
"Ano, thank you so much Tomochin. I had fun" I said "I hope we can do this again"
She just nodded and smiled, I was expecting her to answer but didn't.
"Jaa matane~" I waved my hands and walked inside the gate of the concrete building.
"Wait! Minami.."
"What is it Tomochin?" I looked at her.
"...I like you..."

Girl's feelings are quite unpredictable. Me, even I can't understand myself.

"Tomochin, no.." I said to myself as I hide myself under the sheets.

OTL 高橋みなみ X 板野 友美??





my next update would be next week, since there's a lot of stuff to do in school..thanks for the support guys :)   :imdead:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 4
Post by: Haruko on December 13, 2012, 07:26:03 AM
what?! eh?! tomochin?!? majide?!?!wait not.. let my atsumina alone.. :O
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 4
Post by: kahem on December 13, 2012, 01:24:49 PM
Hum... Takamina don't cheat on Acchan! lol
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 4
Post by: TakaminaBG on December 13, 2012, 01:50:40 PM
We - AtsuMina fans, always do this..... And again Tomochin is going to be the punching bag in this AstuMina fic....
Please update soon!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 4
Post by: stepk on December 13, 2012, 03:21:14 PM
oh tomochin go for the girl of maeda

This is danger  XD

waiting next chapter
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 4
Post by: miayaka on December 13, 2012, 09:39:16 PM
Oh my I think something's coming to break atsumina
TAKA!! please think of acchan always  :cry:
looking forward for your update
 :prayers:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 4
Post by: XxRoByNxX78 on December 13, 2012, 10:13:55 PM
My bias is going to be a obstacle for atsumina i see nooo
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 4
Post by: whiningwillow on December 15, 2012, 03:49:23 AM
I'll be updating later, because I found out that the submission of our projects will be next year :onionwhip:

freedom!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 4
Post by: Wmatsui22 on December 15, 2012, 11:20:54 AM
Hello.

Please Update !!!

:)

+WMatsui_22+
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 5
Post by: whiningwillow on December 18, 2012, 01:06:42 PM
Chapter 5

*beep beep*


     -I had so much fun yesterday Minami. I didn't know that Maeda-san is a good singer. I hope we could go out again some other time, a picnic I guess. Good night Minami. May your relation with Maeda-san..hehehe >))) before I forgot, get well soon-
                  xoxo Yuko


*beep beep*


     -Nee, Minami. Can I come over today? I'm so worried about you right now. I'll bring over the photocopied notes of your class today. About the other day, I had fun with you guys. And, uhmmmmm..can I stay there for tonight? Please? Get well soon Minami. I love you :*-
            :heart: A  :heart:


I skipped class today because of this darn fever. 38 degrees Celsius, I feel like a log for god's sake. Where the hell I got this?


Yesterday is the first time I went out with friends, so unlikely of me, since I usually stay at home and do nothing; of course, if Acchan wasn't there, I wouldn't go.


*doorbell rings*


"It must be Acchan.." I said to myself. I tried getting up, but drastically failed.


My bedroom door opened. It's mom.
"Minami, Acchan is here"
Acchan entered the room with papers on her hand. That must be the notes she was talking about.
"Mom, can she stay here tonight?" I asked.
"Sure sure, no problem. Acchan, please take care of her ok?" mom went outside and closed the door.


~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~I dunno if I really need to put this but, O_O sorry :((~~~~~~~~~~~~~


Acchan gave me the 'stare' as soon as the door closed behind her. She removed her glasses and moved towards me very slowly.
"..Mi-na-mi.."
I was powerless to resist, but but..
I hid myself under my green blanket, thinking that she might hold back.
"You're not going to do this to me again. I won't let you Acchan.."
Her weight soon pinned me down the bed, she's on top of me. I can see her godly image through the sheets.
"..Mi-na-mi.." I can feel her lips pressing against mine through the thin fabric that separates us. I tried fighting her cruel advances, but..it's too damn good.
"Acchan, wait.." I moved aside the object  that hinders  our lips from meeting each other "you might.. get.. sic..k"
She interrupted me with a flurry of kisses; deep, warm, moist. My head is going blank as her advances became more and more aggressive, I want her to relax, to do things slowly, but...


~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ O_O ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


I think that my fever have gone from 'bad' to 'worse'. From all the commotion we made. I feel like a kettle filled with boiling water.


Acchan fell asleep beside me, we're exhausted and tired. She has this habit of making me tap her gently until she falls asleep. She looks like a cute kid when sleeping. I kissed her cheek and followed her into the world of deep slumber.


Its 9:00PM, I was awakened by the sound of the alarm. I feel much better, I think so. I get up and walked slowly to the door. I hear a familiar voice upon nearing the door. I descended the stairs leading to the living room. Tomochin was there..talking with Acchan.


Memories of what happened last time flashed on my mind. I'm frozen from where I am standing. I tried going back up, but Acchan saw me.


"Oh, Minami is here, Tomochin" Acchan assisted me to the couch.
"I'm here to visit you Minami." Tomochin handed out a basket of fruits "I was worried when Oshima-San told me that you are sick"
I'm can't utter any word. All I feel is the awkwardness of the situation.
"We talked about a lot of things, Minami. I was surprised when Itano-san told me that you are childhood friends." Acchan said while peeling an apple.


Their conversation continued for 30mins. until Tomochin decided to leave. I didn't say anything. I kept silent the whole time.
"What's wrong Minami? You're not saying anything the whole time" Acchan asked.
"Nothing nothing. Let's go back up to my room." I pulled her towards the stairs "I feel sick again.."
"Ok, I'll get your dinner later."


That time, when Tomochin told me that she likes me, I answered "No.." but she pulled me and,
.
.
kissed me..

(・・?)板野 友美 X 高橋みなみ X 前田敦 ??
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 5
Post by: bimbo on December 18, 2012, 01:47:39 PM
Takamina surely can't resist Acchan  :luvluv1:

Even though I am a big fan of Atsumina, TakaTomo is my hidden favourite pairing :shy2:

I can't wait for the next update!  :tantrum:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 5
Post by: TakaminaBG on December 18, 2012, 01:51:04 PM
Go ACCHAN!!! Go TOMOCHIN!!!
God, can't we have... like... both!!! I mean AtsuMina and TakaTomo?  :banghead:
Please update soon!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 5
Post by: miayaka on December 18, 2012, 05:04:09 PM
cheering maeda atsuko for the win! :onioncheer: :onioncheer: :onioncheer:
make taka yours only!!
p.s.
I like atsuxtomo also btw hee hee hee
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 5
Post by: stepk on December 18, 2012, 08:49:35 PM
Atsumina? or takatomo?  :? support to ammm .... both   XD

Please update soon  :twothumbs
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 5
Post by: yourockme on December 19, 2012, 02:24:51 AM
Uhhh
TAKATOMO! ATSUMINA!
i want takatomo moments Too LOL
Can u make it?
TEHEHE arghhh i dunno
Please update soon muahh

Dont forget to make some takatomo
moments and make acchan jealous
WHAHAHA THANK YOU
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 5
Post by: Haruko on December 19, 2012, 05:42:50 AM
Go ACCHAN!!! Go TOMOCHIN!!!
God, can't we have... like... both!!! I mean AtsuMina and TakaTomo?  :banghead:
Please update soon!!

jaja atsuminaaaaaaaaa  :rock:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 5
Post by: whiningwillow on December 19, 2012, 03:40:17 PM
im half-way through on chapter 6 (even though my chapters are short..) /o/
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 5
Post by: whiningwillow on December 23, 2012, 01:04:56 PM
Chapter 6



Yuko-san invited me to her Mom's party, I obliged since I need a breather from all these school works that has been keeping me busy from time to time. Besides, I know that she invited...Minami


When we're in middle school, We used to play in our houses. We usually play pretend; me, saving the princess from the dragon's lair. 'My princess! Prince Tomo will save you' that is my cool line. She will yell 'Help me! Help me Prince Tomo'. I feel so special to her during those times. But as we get older, we seldom see each other; is it because were getting much more mature? I tried talking to her once, but I felt so uneasy and I ran away.


"Do I like her already?" I asked myself millions of times. I tried removing that idea from my mind, but it keeps on popping and popping up. I guess I like her...no, I love her already.


Its 12:30PM when I arrive at the house of Yuko-san, I hope she's (Minami) still here.
"Yuko-san!"
"Tomomi! Come in, come in" she greeted me and she led me inside the house. I hand her the present I bought for her mom.
"Ano Yuko-san, did Minami came here already?" I asked. Yuko-san gave me a scary look.
"Minami left a while ago. That shorty, she'll pay for what she did" I wonder what Minami did, besides she's too good to do something bad or terrible.
"I'll be going Yuko-san.."


I burst out of the room without properly saying goodbye to Yuko-san. I  hope that I can catch up to Minami. This time..this time I'll talk to her. Say to her what I feel. This feeling that I've been keeping for a long long time.


RUN! RUn! Run! run....run.......run......r...un.........my legs are starting to fail me, but there she is. I can see her from afar.


She's with someone..


I hid behind the post to conceal my presence. Then..


Tears started falling down from my eyes. Sadness filled my very being.


She..she kissed her. My heart sank as I watch, across the cold and humid street, Minami and the school's top student Maeda-San kissing.







sorry if its short guys  :frustrated:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 6 *up*
Post by: FNK23 on December 23, 2012, 02:40:29 PM
ahh poor tomoo  :mon hanky:
please make some takatomo again  :mon cute:
i like atsumina most, but takatomo is cutee  :mon squee:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 6 *up*
Post by: miayaka on December 23, 2012, 05:18:22 PM
They're kissing!!!
 :luvluv1:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 6 *up*
Post by: Haruko on December 23, 2012, 09:29:15 PM
They're kissing!!!
 :luvluv1:

yeah! i want a feel sorryfor tomochin.. but atsumina is kissing.. of course i dont feel sorry.. T_T Im a bad person
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 6.5 and 7 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on December 31, 2012, 06:22:45 AM
Chapter 6.5

'I love you' she said. She runs around while I'm chasing her across the calm clearing. We were laughing, running, playing around in circles. We sat down to take a rest, she said 'close your eyes'. I closed my eyes without any hesitation. My mind is clear of any random thoughts, it's only her that's in it. I can feel her soft lips touching mine. I can feel the warmth of her love through that kiss. As I slowly opened my eyes, I see no Acchan, but Tomochin.


Nightmare again. My hands are shaking in fear. Cold sweat is sliding off the surface of my skin.
"What the hell is that all about?" I asked my self.
Acchan's arm suddenly pulled me back down to the bed. Her legs pinned mine.
"Go back to sleep Minami. I'm here." she whispered.











Chapter 7

It took me a while to process the situation. I..can't stop the tears from falling. I shriveled on the dark damp corner of the road. I held myself, thinking that it was all just a dream. But...no, everything is real. Minami....am I too late? I guess I'm too slow in realizing my true feelings.


It has been 4 days, I still can't blink my eye properly. I've been sulking on the corner of the room, curled up like a ball. My eyes hurt from too much crying. My classmates are always asking if I'm okay but I always answer with 'Ah yes, I'm so much fine. I've been watching too much dramas lately'. Yuko-san is very much concerned about me, she's always asking me to tell her everything, but I always say that I'm okay.


*beep beep*

      -Nee, Tomomi. Do you want to go somewhere tomorrow? I think that we should have a breather from all the fuss in school. I'm inviting some friends. Please come, okay?-
       Xoxo Yuko

     -Sorry Yuko-san, I have to decline for now. Im not feeling okay lately, I think I need some rest for now. Thanks for inviting me by the way-
      T0m0m0

     -Ah I see. Please get well soon Tomomi. Don't stress yourself, okay? See you soon -
      xoxo Yuko

    -Have fun tomorrow Yuko-san  Take care-
     T0m0m0

*beep*


I'll tell her everything today. I just wanted to relay this goddamned feeling. I don't care if she'll reject me, I just want to let her know.


I trailed her as soon as she passed by the gate of the school. I couldn't bring myself to her, I'm just too scared. She went inside the 24/7 store 2 blocks away. I waited across the street, ahhhhhh! She's running!


RUN! RUN! my legs, please don't fail me now..
*THUD!*
Ouch..it's as I hit something. My head hurts and my butt too.
"Im so sorry. I wasn't looking..eh, Tomochin!?" a familiar voice. It's..it's Minami. My heart starts racing, it's beating too fast right now. Calm down Tomochin, calm down.
"No worries Minami, I wasn't looking either" I dusted my skirt off, trying to act cool and all "I'm sorry too"
What am I gonna do? Will I tell her right now? Waaaaaaaa!! How? When? What? My head is spinning.


"Im sorry for being so sudden, but can we walk together since we live next to each other. Do you have any other places to go to?" she asked.
"I don't have any other places to go. Is something wrong?"
"Uhmmm..nothing nothing. I just thought that we should have a small talk since we didn't talk to each other for a while" she's trembling, I can see it from her hands.


We walked together on our way home. Our houses are just few blocks away from each other. Everything feels awkward and I guess, she feels that way too. I kept my composure, keeping my self calm. I know I had to say it, I just need to time it right.
"Quite nostalgic isn't it? When were in grade school we used to walk together like this. I kinda miss the long walks we used to do.." what the hell did I just said?!!! My heart, please be calm.
"Haha... Me too"


We talked about everything on our way. It's feels like everything returned to normal. I need to say it...this time.


Soon, we arrived at the front of her apartment.
"Thank you so much Tomochin. I had fun" she walked inside the gate "Jaa matane~"
"Wait! Minami..."
"What is it Tomochin?"
"I...I like you..."


I ran towards her without thinking. Minami...Minami...


I wrapped my arms around her.


"Minami, I love you..."


I kissed her.













sorry for the long wait (thinking that there's anyone waiting for the update) OTL
I've been going everywhere ever since the vacation started. Oh well.. HAPPY NEW YEAR GUYS!  :farofflook:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 6.5 and 7 *update*
Post by: TakaminaBG on December 31, 2012, 06:29:27 AM
So that's how everything started.
Tomochin. Ganbatte!!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 6.5 and 7 *update*
Post by: Haruko on December 31, 2012, 08:05:23 AM
wow that was fast..
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 6.5 and 7 *update*
Post by: Wmatsui22 on January 01, 2013, 06:49:45 AM
-Hello.

-Nice chapter!

-Thank you for update :)

-Ganbatte

-WMatsui_22-
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 6.5 and 7 *update*
Post by: cisda83 on January 04, 2013, 11:29:37 PM
Thank you for the update...

I like how you make it Atsumina... with a bit of TakaTomo in between...

Can't wait for your next chapter.

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on January 11, 2013, 02:40:55 PM
Chapter 8


"Christmas season is here Minami!!" Oshima-san cheerfully said while we're walking along the corridor "Do you have any plans?"
Plans plans plans..I dont have any to begin with, unless Acchan asks me out.
"I don't have any Oshima-san..I'd rather stay at home like I always do.."
"Hmmmmmmm..why don't you ask Maeda-san eh" she gave me that evil grin which is full of suspicion and evil "Are you two going out? Hahahahaha"
"Ehhhhhhhh?!!!!! No no no..I told you, she's just my tutor" what to do? What to do? Here I go again.
"Just kidding Minami. Ah there she is" she pointed towards Acchan, who's going to our direction "Maeda-saaaaan!!"

*school bell rings*

Whew, class' finally over, another boring day. I fixed my things and I noticed a piece of folded paper inside my desk.
"I wonder what this is.." I unfold the paper

-I just wanna talk Minami, fountain 4PM-
Tomochin

I've been avoiding her ever since that 'incident'. I'm afraid.. afraid of Acchan knowing what happened. What am I gonna do? Tears started falling down from my eyes, because of the numerous possibilities that could happen.

*beep beep*

-Can you wait for me until 4:30? I just need to do some errands for the treasurer. I love you-
           <3 A <3

I started walking down to the fountain, that fateful place where Acchan and me started. My footsteps are uncertain, slow, dense, it's as if something bad would happen. I can feel it, this uneasiness and uncertainty is starting to kill me.

I can see her from afar, that brown curly hair dangling over the shoulders. My hands started trembling with the sight of her. I'm scared.
"Tomochin.." she turned to me. Her eyes were upon mine.
"Minami..I'm sorry" tears started falling down from her eyes. Without warning, her small frail body falls down to the ground.
"Tomochin! Tomochin..you're burning hot..we should get you to the doctor or the infirmary." what to do? What to do? Hold on Tomochin..
"I'm sorry Minami.."

I ended up bringing her to the hospital near the school, since the school's infirmary is closed. I looked at my watch, it's 5:30PM. I've been waiting for the room door to open so I could check up on Tomochin. I hope that she's okay.
A doctor came out of the room.
"Takahashi-san?" the doctor asked me
"Yes..is my friend okay?"
"She has been working her body up to the extent that her body gave up..'Over-fatigue' is the cause Ms. Takahashi" the doctor explained "She needs a lot of rest."

I rushed inside the room to check up on her. She's sleeping. I sat on the chair beside her bed, I held hand, feeling the warmth of hers.
"I'm sorry Tomochin.."
"I'm sorry too Minami.." she looked at me suddenly and gave me a faint smile "I should be the one apologizing.."
"Shhhhhh.." I put my finger over her lips "Don't worry about it Tomochin. Go rest, you need lots if it."
She smiled and went back to the world of slumber.

*beep beep*

-Is she okay already? I'm on my way there already. Do you want anything?-
<3 A <3

-The doctor said she needs lots of rest, a day or two will be enough. Please get me some apples on your way here. Take care-
TMina <3

It's 6:00Pm according to the clock hanging on the wall. It feels gloomy inside this hospital room, the lights are off, only the brightness of the moon gives light in this room. I suddenly remembered the days I spent with Tomochin. I cried.
"I should've treasured them.." I said to myself.

"Maeda-san isn't it?"
"I told you to sleep right" I was surprised that she's awake. And how did she know?

"It will be better if I just come to dislike you, Minami. I shouldn’t have come to know these feelings. I should've forget everything about you even I know that it will be painful, painful just to throw everything away. Why? Why did we became like this? When I close my eyes, I feel like you’ll be right here with me just like back then. I guess this is just one-sided..."

"What are you saying Tomochin? I don't understand.."

The door suddenly opened. It's Acchan..

"She's here, Minami.."







UPDATE AT LAST!! (~_")~ any expectations for the next chapter? :)
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: TakaminaBG on January 11, 2013, 03:40:53 PM
- What do you mean, Tomochin. I don't understand.
Does Minami really understand nothing?? I mean, come on, no one is that stupid.... right??
Ahhhhh!!! My TakaTomo!!!!!  :OMG:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: stepk on January 11, 2013, 07:43:00 PM
I want atsumina   :wub:  XD

thanks for update
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: cisda83 on January 11, 2013, 10:13:32 PM
Ah... Tomochin... is sick... and very sad...

Minami is confuse... probably blaming herself.

Anyhow, nice update there... can't wait to see the next

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: Haruko on January 12, 2013, 05:19:54 AM
- What do you mean, Tomochin. I don't understand.
Does Minami really understand nothing?? I mean, come on, no one is that stupid.... right??



but i prefer atsumina!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: korin48 on January 12, 2013, 07:54:29 AM
Takamina is really confused huh?
I wanna know what happen!!


- What do you mean, Tomochin. I don't understand.
Does Minami really understand nothing?? I mean, come on, no one is that stupid.... right??
Ahhhhh!!! My TakaTomo!!!!!  :OMG:

Uhm... Are you the shipper of TakaTomo? I thought you shippered AtsuMina...?
Because of your Dp... >_>
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on January 18, 2013, 11:58:36 AM
Chapter 9




I was staring blankly outside the dark gloomy sky. Everything seems so normal, nothing special, like my days in school. The three of us were looking blankly at the spaces, silence filled the room. No one dares to talk, no one even tries to bring up a conversation. My phone suddenly lit up, notifying me a mail..

*Beep beep*

           -Nee Minami, can we go home already? Her parents are on the way and it's Friday..you know?-
                 <3 A <3

           -Can we please just wait for her parents to arrive? We can't leave her alone right? Besides...she's my friend. We still have tomorrow Acchan-
                  TMina <3

           -But, okay..nevermind-
                    A

I looked at Acchan, she looks angry. She suddenly stood up and walked towards the door.
"I'll just get something to drink."

"Hey.. Wa..wait!" I followed her outside the room. I grabbed her hand, but she resisted, she pulled her hand forcefully.

"Hey..what's wrong with you Acchan? Why are you acting like this?"

"And why are you acting like that HUH?! Looking all so caring and stuff."

"She's my friend Acchan!!! How can you be so cold?! What do you want me to do?! Leave her dying in school? Leave her alone here in the hospital?! What is the matter with you?"

"We talked about this right? Friday is our day, OUR DAY! then all you gonna do is to spend this day with your friend? IM YOUR GIRLFRIEND! YOUR GIRLFRIEND MINAMI!"

In seconds, without thinking, my hands slapped her face. Tears started falling down.

"You.. You're horrible.."

I ran back to the room, but she pulled my hand.

"Wait Minami..I'm so...."

"All you think about is yourself! YOU AND ONLY YOURSELF Tell me, do you really care about me? You're horrible..and selfish..."
"Is this what you want? Fine..I'm breaking up with you Minami.."

Time stopped upon hearing those words. Everything around feels so heavy. This vast space is narrowing down on me. I can't breath, I can't utter any word. Why does it have to be like this? I'm frozen on this place where I'm standing. Its ending..ending......end...

She ran towards the opposite direction, her skirt is fluttering aimlessly across the vast white corridor. She's gone..There are no more traces of her..I sulked in front of the bedroom door, crying. I can't think of anything but to cry, cry, cry. Her words burnt into my head and it kept on repeating and repeating.

A familiar sensation touched me. Tomochin.
"I'm so sorry Minami. It's....it's all my fault.."
"Shut up. It's not your fault Tomochin. Go back.." I can't stop these eyes from crying. Hearing her words made me more horrible.
She pulled me up and wrapped her arms tightly around me. I can feel her warmth embracing my whole body. This..this is what I needed now.
"Minami, stop crying..."
I clutched on her arms which made wrinkles on the shirt she's wearing. I want to stop crying, but I can't.
"Tomochin..why? Why does it have to be like this?" I kept on asking. It's forever recurring "Why!? WHY?!!"

"Minami.." Tomochin pinned me on the door, closing it on the process.
"Tomo...chin.....I don't now...if we should do this" I know what's gonna happen, but I'm too broken right now. I'm too frail, too weak.

"Such beauty is a waste, Minami" she whispered. Her fingers traced along my spine, sending shivers throughout my body. My body starts to tremble. My knees are shaking.
"Tomo..chin..." my body gave up resisting. I was completely succumbed by her actions. My head is turning blank, I can't think of anything.

"I love you Minami..."

"Tomochin, I..."

Her lips touched mine..

Goodbye Acchan...




( ;´Д`) 板野 友美 X 高橋みなみ??????
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: korin48 on January 18, 2013, 01:57:10 PM
You broke my AtsuMina!!!!! Please explain to Takamina, Acchan!!
Please update soon!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: stepk on January 18, 2013, 08:18:53 PM
so...
you break up atsumina 
and minami, prefer tomochin?  :shocked
update  :D but Im confused.  :?
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on January 18, 2013, 09:12:14 PM
but sometimes it happens in relationships right? like you break up with someone, and with the spur of the moment, you try to seek comfort with someone @_@

well, that's my view.. gomen OTL
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: TakaminaBG on January 18, 2013, 09:38:07 PM
Okay, I'm a hardcore AtsuMina fan!!! But I love TakaTomo so much. For me personaly  they are perfect for each other!
If you tell me to choose between AtsuMina and TakaTomo, it's like you telling me to choose between food and water when I'm dying for both.(Did that even make any scense?)
More TakaTomo!!!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: takamae on January 19, 2013, 01:55:33 AM
WHAT!!!! it's so freakin easy for them to break up
What's the matter with atsumina??  :angry:

Please....please...make them made up  :bow:  :bow:
Thank you :)
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on January 19, 2013, 04:50:31 AM
WHAT!!!! it's so freakin easy for them to break up
What's the matter with atsumina??  :angry:

Please....please...make them made up  :bow:  :bow:
Thank you :)


my fics are so short so i've been pretty much trying to pack things up to finish the story (the whole story) fast..sorry about that  :sweat:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: Haruko on January 19, 2013, 05:08:46 AM
wait..what?!!? no way!! takabaka WTF are you doing?!.... -_______- my atsumina heart
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: arvinbfg90000 on January 19, 2013, 11:43:55 AM
OMG, can't wait for the next chapter~

Go Taka~Tomo :D
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: FNK23 on January 19, 2013, 03:07:25 PM
whatt ??! Why it's flow soo fastt ? I mean, your story is great, i really enjoy that, but why it's seem like the final chapter is coming up faster than i thought :(
please made up all stuff, acchan and takamina deserve a clear explaination.
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 8 *update*
Post by: takamae on January 19, 2013, 03:47:31 PM
WHAT!!!! it's so freakin easy for them to break up
What's the matter with atsumina??  :angry:

Please....please...make them made up  :bow:  :bow:
Thank you :)


my fics are so short so i've been pretty much trying to pack things up to finish the story (the whole story) fast..sorry about that  :sweat:



As long as in the end astumina forever :)
Sorry.... but I just love them, still you are the writer so it's up to you
I can only hope  :bow:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 9 *update*
Post by: Archie28 on January 19, 2013, 06:24:20 PM
They already broke up!?  :angry:

Minami~ don't be like that  :panic:

Acchan! do something! :panic:

Please update soon~  :bow:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 9 *update*
Post by: cisda83 on January 22, 2013, 01:20:23 PM
Wah.. Minami is heartbroken about that...

Well Tomochin is taking advantage of Minami's weak state...

What are you doing Minami... snap out of it...

Well can't wait to see the next

Thank you for the update

 :wub: :inlove: :love: :heart:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 9 *update*
Post by: Hii_chan on January 22, 2013, 04:07:54 PM
Why? Takamina why dont you chasing Acchan? :banghead: :banghead:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 9 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on January 25, 2013, 06:48:59 AM
Chapter 10

"Nee Minami, do you want to go out today?" Tomochin said while undoing the wrap of the bento I brought "The doctor said that I will be discharged today, right?"
I opened the blinds of the hospital room. The weather's nice on a cold Sunday morning.
"Lemme think about it Tomochin. You shouldn't push yourself too much, okay? Besides, there's a lot of no-class-days this week" she gave me that too-cute-to-disregard pout. I really wanted to go, but she needs to recover.


It's been two days since. Acchan, what happened? I kept asking what happened that day. I know that it was all just a miscommunication, why does it have to end up like this? I thought I found someone worth keeping. I thought that every day's a perfect day, but I guess nothing's perfect right? My heart is still hurting. It hurts so badly.


"I'll just go outside Tomochin.." I turned my back on her, hiding my eyes that are starting to burst in tears.
"Okay" Tomochin answered "Please make it short, don't make the food wait"


Is it too late?
Is it too soon?
Or
We're just not the right fit?


It's 3 in the afternoon. I started fixing her things, since her parents is out-of-town because of work. They asked me to watch over Tomochin until they come back.
"Nee Minami"
"What is it Tomochin?" I asked.
"Take me somewhere later. Please?" I guess she really wants to go out. "Even if it's just for a while"
I guess it wouldn't hurt to say yes.
"Okay okay" I gave her a smile.

I'm pushing her wheelchair she's been sitting on. 'She hasn't fully recovered' said the doctor earlier.
It seems that there's a small bazaar over the park, so we decided to go there. There's a lot of people, it seems it's a Xmas bazaar.
"Nee Minami, can we look around for a bit?" she asked
"Sure Tomochin. But we should go home after a while ok? It's getting dark already" I answered.
She nodded happily.

We stopped at every shop that we see. There's a lot of wonderful yet strange things that are being sold. We tried some food that are new to us like cabbage flavored ice-cream that is surprisingly good, chili-flavored candy from Mexico which is sweet instead of spicy and a whole lot more. We laughed and smiled at each other. We shared each other stories that are quite nostalgic-like. I completely forgot everything that happened the other day, thank you Tomochin.

Suddenly, fireworks shot up to the sky in synchronized patterns and motions. We both looked up in the beauty of the sky that is glittering above us. I took a glance on Tomochin's entranced look, she looks cute and her lips are still pouting. This memory, I will surely recall this constantly. She made me happy, I hope I made her happy as well.

"Tomochin"
"What is it Minami?"
I gave her a kiss on her cheek.
"I'm happy, I hope that I made you happy tonight"
She stood up and she wrapped her arms around me.
"Thank you Minami" she whispered

"Tomochin.."
"Minami?"
"I could get used to this."
"Get used to what?"
"To what are we doing right now. This hugging and kissing"
"..."

I closed my eyes and kissed her lips under the color-filled sky.

Soon these feelings that I still have for 'her' will fade like the seasons.

Sayonara..


(> . <) 板野 友美 X 高橋みなみ






Thank you for reading and for supporting this fic of mine. I'll be ending this fic in a matter of chapters. What do you think will happen in the following chapters guys? :)
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: Haruko on January 25, 2013, 07:09:55 AM
DAFAQ!! what da hell are you doing?!?! .. O_O
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on January 25, 2013, 07:22:42 AM
DAFAQ!! what da hell are you doing?!?! .. O_O

gomen gomen :(

but wait for the next chapter.. ; A ;
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: Hii_chan on January 25, 2013, 07:27:30 AM
so... Takamina really break with Atsuko and go out with tomochin :dunno: :dunno:
well.. I have no problem with that coz I like Takatomo too
Thank for update and waiting for you :byebye: :byebye:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: FNK23 on January 25, 2013, 08:25:53 AM
takamina had broke up with acchan for two days but now she's with tomochin ? Minami looks like a player for me. o_O
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: takamae on January 25, 2013, 09:27:29 AM
Speechless and mad  :angry:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: kahem on January 25, 2013, 09:31:52 AM
Eh?! Takamina and Tomochin didn't waste time lol
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: korin48 on January 25, 2013, 01:09:21 PM
WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING!?! AtsuMina broke up!? :scolding:
My heart broken!  :ptam-hbk:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: Archie28 on January 25, 2013, 03:04:07 PM
That was fast...

Tomochin and Takamina are a couple already?!

my Atsumina  :on speedy:

Bring back my Atsumina!  :angry1:

Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: stepk on January 25, 2013, 07:15:54 PM
And if acchan discover this.  :O
acchan will be mad.
Atsumina come back.
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: cisda83 on January 26, 2013, 04:51:59 AM
Atsumina is gone...

TakaTomo is here.... well I can understand Takamina being with Tomochin but honestly... Takamina think....

Hope Takamina relies everything before too late... one of them going to be hurt.. whether is Tomochin or Atsuko...

Anyway, great update... Thank you... can't wait to see the next

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs

Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on February 01, 2013, 06:34:39 PM
sorry if the update is taking too long, there's so much stuff going on...issue on Miichan, Tomochin's graduation announcement..*sigh* too many darn things are happening ; A ;
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: TakaminaBG on February 01, 2013, 09:25:43 PM
In this situation I prefer TakaTomo.
It doesn't matter with who Minami ends up with, As long as she is happy, I'm ok with it.
Good job with this fic. Can't wait for the update!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 10 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on February 05, 2013, 05:10:17 PM
Chapter 11

It's 12 in the afternoon, lunch time. Tomochin is absent today because she went to the doctor for her regular check up. I guess I'll be eating alone on the rooftop.

"Minami!" It's Oshima-san "Do you mind if I eat with you?"
"Sure sure. Good timing, I was looking for someone to go with"

We went upstairs to the rooftop of the school. It's empty as always. I placed the green mat over the concrete floor.
"Nee Minami, thank you for everything."
"Ehh? Why the sudden thanks Oshima-san? I didn't do anything or so"
"I'll be migrating to the states. New York." I was shocked by the sudden news. I felt a thug in my heart, a friend..leaving.
"When? Why? Why now Oshima-san?" I asked
"Tomorrow morning. I think I'll find myself there." she pointed at the bright blue skies "I want to fly, travel. Like a bird, Minami. Nee, tell me, what do you want in life Minami?"
I stared blankly at the bright blue sky. I didn't answer. It seems I don't know what I really want. I gave a deep faint sigh.
"I should be going now Minami" she stood up and fixed her things on the mattress
"Ehh? Where are you going Oshima-san?"
"I'm going home now. Thank you Minami" she took off. Her presence slowly disappeared as she walked away.

Her question kept repeating on my mind. 'What do I want in life?'. I stared again at the sky that is turning gray, threatening to burst out millions of water droplets. The school bell rings, but I didn't bother to move an inch.

Rain started to pour, but I'm still here. I didn't move from where I'm sitting at. I didn't know why. I curled up into a ball, my arms around my knees while lying my back against the wall. Raindrops continue on ravaging me, but I didn't mind it.

What do I really want.....

Then, rain stopped, but I can still hear it hitting the surface. As I opened my eyes, an umbrella is above me.
"You don't want to get sick right?"
"Ehh Tomochin? I though you were in the hospital? What are you doing here?"
"I miss you already so I came here" she handed over an extra umbrella "Get up. Let's go to the infirmary"

Shinoda-san, our school's doctor, is kind enough to lend me extra clothes. The clothes are quite big for me since she's a tall slender woman. She's a real beauty.
"Taka-chan, please rest here for a while ok?" I answered with a nod.

"How did you know where am I?" I asked Tomochin, who is sitting beside the bed.
"I just know it Minami" she answered with a smile "By the way, what are you doing there?"
"I talked with Oshima-san, she said she is going to the states tomorrow" I stared at the plain white ceiling which gave a gloomy feel "Another good friend, gone"
I looked at Tomochin's face, she looks sad upon hearing the news. They have been classmates for quite sometime, I guess they're close to each other.

It's already 4 in the afternoon, and it's still raining hard. I think I caught a cold. Shinoda-san gave me some antibiotics and a prescription. She really is a good doctor.
"Drink this Taka-chan, so you'll be ok in no time"
"Are you ok now Tomochin? What did the doctor said about you condition" I asked
"Nee Minami.." she interrupted
"..." Im quite puzzled. The room was suddenly filled with silence. This feeling, I know this. Something's not quite right.

"Destiny is such a cruel thing isn't it? My heart is always breaking since I can't do anything about it. This reality, this fragile reality, there's no way I can change it." tears started falling from Tomochin's eyes. I rushed to her side and held her tight.
"What's the problem Tomochin? Stop crying so sudden.." I held her tightly with these small arms of mine.
"I guess I'm too late isn't it? Minami, I want to be with you, that what I feel right now..but...I think it's just a dream now"
"Wha..what are you saying?" I can't find the words to say. What does she mean? I don't understand.
"You still love Maeda-san right, Minami?" she whispered "I want you to be happy Minami, that's because I love you.."
"Stop saying nonsense Tomochin.." I was at loss. Everything is still a puzzle. I don't understand what is happening right now.

"At least my wish was still granted even if it's for a while..."

"Even if the last moments come, don't cry, be sure to smile Minami."

"I only have months to live..."

"I have cancer..."
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 11 *update*
Post by: TakaminaBG on February 05, 2013, 06:00:38 PM
My TakaTomo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
You are kidding, right? She can't..... she can't possibly DIE!!! Oh MY GOD!!!
My tears can't stop!
If you are going to kill Tomochin, at least give some pervert TakaTomo moment!
Update SOON!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 11 *update*
Post by: stepk on February 06, 2013, 01:16:23 AM
Noo Tomomi
 
  :fainted:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 11 *update*
Post by: cisda83 on February 06, 2013, 07:59:28 AM
What tomochin is dying... even when she did get Minami.... she can't be with Minami...

That's too cruel...

Ah Minami is going to do...

Can't wait to see the next

And Thank you for the update....

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 11 *update*
Post by: miayaka on February 10, 2013, 09:21:33 PM
wait!! what? why?
tomochin!!  :gyaaah: i shipped atsumina but i dont want her to die..
looking forward for the next update  :panic:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 11 *update*
Post by: aoi_sora on February 11, 2013, 05:47:05 PM
yuko = leaving

tomochin = dying

T^T

update soon and thanks... :D

 :bow: :bow: :bow: :bow: :bow:

/o/
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 12 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on February 15, 2013, 05:01:42 PM
Chapter 12

Time. Its the only thing that is permanent. Yes, it moves it's numbers, but it's presence will be eternal. You can't stop it or halt its progress if you want to. It will pass. It will devour everything, but it's mere existence will always and forever be there.

If only I can buy time.

If only I can stop it..

I feel so useless. It's always like this, can't do anything for anyone. I want to say something, but I can't utter even a single word. This feeling, just like last time, when she left.

Memories flash in front of me, like a film rolling. Our memories as kids, growing up and doing childish things. The memory of the bazaar. The huge crowd around us, then fireworks shoot above, skies filled with wonderful patterns and colors.

"I believe that if you love someone it need not be that the two of you became lovers. Showing your love to that person is enough" Tomochin faintly whispered "Minami, thanks for being my wonderful best friend"
"You're not gonna die Tomochin. No...no..." my embrace tightens with each second. "It's not true..."
"It's much better if we part this way. Promise me Minami.." I cannot stop the tears from falling. My eyes started to hurt. This cant be real.

It's 6 in the evening. The rain already let up. All I can see outside the window are the orange lamp posts that filled the streets with light.

We walked aimlessly across the damp quiet street. Our hands intertwined. We walk wherever our feet lead us under the cold night sky. Still, I can't remove the fact that this girl beside me now is dying. She's still smiling as if everything is okay.
"Nee Minami, what do you like about Maeda-san?"
"Ehhhhhhhh????!" I was completely caught off-guard "Wha..what are you saying?"
"I know what you said last time during the bazaar was just because of the spur of the moment" she continued "I know that you still love her. You were always crying and crying and pretending that it's nothing."

Acchan. Acchan. Acchan. Hearing just her name makes my heart race. I can clearly remember everything, our moments, our time with each other. It seems that one does not simply forget. Feelings doesn't fade that easy. What do I need to do?

We traced the park that we used to play when we were kids.
"Feels nostalgic isn't it Minami?" Tomochin pointed at a familiar tree "I rescued your cat there when we were kids"
"Hahahaha" I suddenly remembered that incident when she fell upon rescuing my cat "You look silly after you fell Tomochin"
"It hurts you know. My butt really hurts after that"
"Nee Tomochin, let's go to the swing"

We sit on the swing under the pale night sky. We swing back and forth, cherishing our moments together. But somehow, I feel sad, this may be our last happy moments together. I know that in the next few days, she will be subjected to tests and treatments that will tire the already deteriorated body of hers.

"Nee Minami, I have one last wish.." we stopped our tracks. Tomochin gazed upon the sight of the moon above us "Would you mind fulfilling it?"
"Of course Tomochin, you're my bestfriend after all" I answered.
"Get her back.."
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 12 *update*
Post by: Elo on February 15, 2013, 09:14:11 PM
nooooooooooooo tomochin
you killed tomochin  :cry: :cry:

yosh atsumina is back  :thumbsup

update soon  :P
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 12 *update*
Post by: stepk on February 15, 2013, 10:50:50 PM
atsumina will be back  :D
but tomochin you can't back    :cry:
thanks for update
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 12 *update*
Post by: cisda83 on February 16, 2013, 09:41:05 PM
Ah.. Tomochin... poor Tomochin...

Yeah... she's so great, willing to part with Minami... when she needed her the most... right this moment more than ever...

I think she wanted Minami to remember her in her beautiful self not her deteriorated self...

She even asked Minami to get Atsuko back... soon more than later...

What's Minami going to do...?

Is Minami going to be with Atsuko now... or later after Tomochin died...?

Thanx for the update

Can't wait to see the next

 :wub: :inlove: :love: :heart:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 12 *update*
Post by: sopiyah on February 21, 2013, 07:19:40 AM
atsumina forever....

waitting for your update.....

nice fanfic.....  :twothumbs :twothumbs


 :heart: :heart:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 13 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on February 24, 2013, 09:02:09 AM
sorry for the slow update..this "maybe" the second to the last chapter of this fic ^_^ thank you guys for supporting and giving feedbacks to this fic

Chapter 13

It's 23rd of December and it's already snowing. Looking outside the window gave me a sense of longing for someone. My parents are always going here and there, leaving me alone in the process. Tomochin has been going in and out of the hospital. Oshima-san always send letters telling her wonderful experiences in the states. And Acchan, haven't got any news about her..I don't even have a chance to see her in school.

"I guess I need to take a stroll" I said to myself.

I grabbed my purse and my winter coat and went straight out the door. The sight of kids making snow angels on the ice-filled ground made me much lonely (how I wish I could do that with someone). I walked across the cold and icy streets, walk to wherever my feet takes me.

"Taka-chaaaaaan!" a familiar voice yelled out to me. To my surprise it was Shinoda-san.
"Shinoda-san, it nice to see you here. How are you doing?" she looks nice as always. It's like she's radiating a godly-like feel.
"I'm fine Taka-chan. How are you doing?"
"I'm fine too, Shinoda-san. I'm just strolling around since theres nothing much to do at home."
"Come with me. Let's go out. I'm meeting with a friend, I'll introduce you" ehhh? Wait..what?

"KARAOKE?!" I exclaimed "What are we doing here Shinoda-san?"
"We're gonna have fun Taka-chan!" she answered with a laugh that gave something-bad-is-gonna-happen feeling "Ah, there she is"
A tall beautiful woman walked towards us. She's really beautiful and gave a princess-like feels. She has curls on the end of her hair. Every guy she passed by was at awe, even their respective girlfriends were at awe too. She's shining.
"Nyan-Nyan!" Shinoda-san ran towards the girl and hugged her.
"Please stop calling me Nyan!" shouted the girl "It's been years Mariko"
"Can't stop myself Nyan-Nyan. Hahaha"
"Eh? Who is that girl?" She ran towards me and looked at me closely "KAWAII! Who is this Mariko? She's cute and..chibi!"
What?!!!!! I really don't know if It's a compliment or what. Hmmmmppfff, this girl.
"I forgot to introduce her Nyan-Nyan." Shinoda-San walked towards us "Taka-chan this is Kojima Haruna, the friend I'm telling about. Nyan-Nyan this is Takahashi Minami, a frequent in the infirmary in school"
Shinoda-san whispered something to Kojima-san.
"EHHHHHHHHHHHHHH??!!!" Kojima-san suddenly exclaimed "High schoolers nowadays, but Taka-chan, Good job!"
"Ehhh?! What did you said to her Shinoda-san?" I was so curious suddenly. The expression of Kojima-san was huge.
"Nothing nothing Taka-chan. Let's go!"

Days surely pass so fast. We were here in the same place together few months ago. We were singing together, having fun like we are doing today. She was here back then, singing a song for me. She whispered 'Nee Minami, that's for you..' I blushed, I don't know what to do. I held her hand secretly and whispered back 'I love you Acchan..'

"Christmas is coming! Do you have plans Taka-chan?" Kojima-san asked while twirling the silver fork over the plate.
"I don't have any Kojima-san. Maybe I'll just stay home and treat myself to something" I answered. I guess I'll spend this Christmas alone.
"I heard you're into L Taka-chan. Maybe you want to.." Kojima-san whispered "With the two of us.."
"Ehhhhhhhh?!!!!!!!"
"Stop teasing the kid Nyan-Nyan. I know what you're trying to do" Shinoda-san said "Don't mind her Taka-chan"
Kojima-san pouted in disappointment which is cute, much like Tomochin's.

"Ah! A band will perform today. I guess it's our lucky day guys" Kojima-san pointed at the small stage across.
"I wonder what they will play" I asked my self

"Merry Christmas everyone. Our first song is called 'Forever'"

I suddenly felt a tug on my chest as the band starts playing. It's as if I already heard the song before. I heard this before, I'm sure of it.

~~We can keep walking forever
Together, now and forever
This love I clutch close to my heart
Will never change, this one unique
“I love you”
Don’t forget this promise we’re making
Because you’re more important to me than anyone else
I want to make the dreams you told me about come true, little by little
"I love you.."~~

"That was a nice song Acchan"
"It's because I made it for you Minami"
"Ehh?! Really?"
"Of course. Do you like it?"
"I love it Acchan"
"Promise me Minami.."
"Promise what?"
"That we'll be together forever.."
"I promise Acchan.."
"I love you Minami.."
"I love you too Acchan.."


"That song was composed by a friend of mine in school. She hopes that this song will reach the person she loves even though they are away from each other. I hope you guys liked it" the band received a round of applause.

I rushed out from the place leaving Kojima-san and Shinoda-san behind.
"Where are you going Taka-chaaaaaaaan!!!!?" Shinoda-san followed me.
"Im just gonna get something at home Shinoda-san!"

I ran without thinking anything. I want to be with her, that's how I feel. Darn you Acchan, making me crazy at times like this.
An unexplainable feeling rushed throughout my body as I was nearing my apartment. There's a girl standing in front of the apartment door. It's....


"Acchan...?"


"Minami..."


\(^∇^)/ 高橋みなみ X 前田敦子
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 13 *update*
Post by: Archie28 on February 24, 2013, 09:14:04 AM
ATSUMINA! :cow: :cow: :cow: :cow:  :wub: :wub: :wub:

the chapter was so sweet...  :thumbsup

nice update  :thumbsup
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 13 *update*
Post by: cisda83 on February 24, 2013, 09:34:07 AM
Tomochin is still busy going in and out of the hospital by herself... ah.. so sad....

Hehehe... Haruna is so cute and funny... but as usual very attractive...

Takamina's description... cute and chibi.... very funny but very accurate

Ah... finally... Takamina able to meet Atsuko...

What's going to happen with Atsumina?

How about Tomochin, Yuko, Mariko and Haruna?

Can't wait to find out what's going on next...

And Thank you for the update

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 13 *update*
Post by: FNK23 on February 24, 2013, 09:44:00 AM
yeaahh, finallyyyyyy  :farofflook: :farofflook:
why acchan in minami apartment ? do she miss minami ?  :kekeke:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 13 *update*
Post by: Haruko on February 24, 2013, 06:21:20 PM
jeej it was a funny haruna, what about the treesome thing? jaja i laught a lot.. but aww kojiyuu..


yeah atsumina is together well.. almost,,
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 13 *update*
Post by: stepk on February 25, 2013, 01:53:53 AM
stay together...
atsumina :wub:

thanks great update  :twothumbs
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
Post by: whiningwillow on March 04, 2013, 05:38:10 AM
Chapter 14

"Wake up beautiful" a familiar voice whispered, waking me up from the deep world of slumber.
"Acchan..it's too early and it's a Saturday. Could you let me sleep me a little longer?" I opened my eyes but only halfway-through thinking that she'll let me continue on my adventure into the wonderful world of dreams.
"..Mi-na-mi.." I can feel her tongue tracing lines behind my ears. I can't help but moan in guilt. Her hands started roaming under the sheets. The combination of her tongue and her hands are like partners-in-crime, robbing my body of control and sanity.
"Acchan..can..we do this later? It's..too early" my words doesn't seem to reach her as she continues her advances.
"I-ta-da-ki-masu.." my body submitted to her as it can no longer sustain any more of her. Breakfast, Maeda Atsuko-style.

"Nee Acchan.." I looked at my lover who's lying beside me, arms wrapped around my dead-tired body from the morning routine "Let's go out today.."
"Ehh? That's so unlikely of you Minami" her fingers wandered across my upper half which gave a ticklish feel "I thought I could..you know..all day, only the two of us here"
"Acchaaaaan..how many times do you think we did this, this week?"
"Hmmmmmmm..I stopped counting at 15" her finger starts tracing circles on my belly button "Let's just stay here Mi-na-mi.."
"Hmpf..it's our 23rd time already. Can we just get up and go out? Come on, we can do this some other time. And stop those fingers Acchan, you're starting again" I stood up and put on my shirt that's lying on the carpeted floor.
"Minamiiiiiiiiii!! I don't want toooooooooo!" she's always like this. Throwing a tantrum whenever I'm forcing her to get up from the bed.
"Stop acting like a baby Acchan! Get up!"
"Well actually I'm a baby, your baby" I hate to admit it, it's corny but I like it.

I feel at ease whenever Acchan is beside me, this naughty, romantic, intelligent and wonderful girl. But sometimes, I ask myself "How long will this gonna last?". I'm thinking all about  the wonderful days ahead, my plans, her plans, our plans. All I want is to be beside her eventhough she's always tiring me up from all the 'you-know-already' stuff.

We walked across the lively streets of this busy city, streets that seem so boring and common, but eventually transforms into streets that are full of wonders. My fingers are intertwined tightly with hers, never wanting to let go.

Acchan suddenly stopped in the middle of the street. She looked straight into my eyes as if trying to say something.
"Is something wrong Acchan?" I asked "Is there something on my face? Is it dirty?"
"Let's go to the park Minami. It's been ages since the last time I went there"
"Eh? Why do you want to go there Acchan?"
"Dunno. Let's go"

The park is filled with people. It's usually busy during Sunday's but surprisingly it's filled with much people today. There's a lot of kids running around, their parents were just looking over. A kid suddenly tripped, I think she's around 4 or 5, she looks so darn cute while crying. Her father picked her up and brought her back to their table.
"I wonder if we'll have a kid like that" Acchan pointed at the cute girl who just tripped "I want kid who looks just like you Minami. A cute girl who wants to be a cabbage when she grows up"
"Idiot. Stop bringing my childhood memories. I really don't know what am I saying back then. I guess, I must have really liked cabbages when I was a kid" Acchan's always teasing me. Even in our most private time, she can't stop teasing me.
"Ah! Let's go there!"
"Where?" she pointed over the boats on the river. Boats that shaped like ducks where you pedal to make it move.

"It's been years Minami. I really miss these duck boats here"
"Well it really looks like you really miss riding one. When was the last time?" we pedaled across the calm waters, trying to avoid our fellow duck-boat-mates.
"I think when I was 6 maybe. All I can remember is riding  one of this with my father" we pedaled faster and faster "How about you Minami?"
"Me? Hmmm..all I can remember is riding this with my mom. Well, were pretty much close back then" I suddenly remember the times when I was a kid. It saddens me, but what can I do "My parents use to take me out always. Parks, malls, countryside or wherever. But now, they're pretty much engrossed with each other, forgetting that they still have a daughter"
My feet stopped. Tears involuntary fell down from my eyes. I feel heavy, as if I can't breath. Thinking about the current situation of my family, always make me look miserable.
"I'm sorry Acchan. I shouldn't be crying right now. I should be happy right now right? I'm sorry. I'm sorry for ruining this boat ride.." I wipe my tears with the end the scarf that I'm wearing.
She held my arms with her warm hands. And..Acchan's lips touched mine. It was comforting, as always. Ever since we've been together, it was her kiss that makes me feel so special.
"Minami, being with you alone makes this experience special. It's okay to cry, cry as long as you like. Remember, I'm always here Minami." Acchan wiped my tears with her delicate fingers.

We watch the sunset as the day turns into dark. We're still in the water, not minding where the river takes us. My head is on her shoulders, she's singing me a song. A song she made long ago.
"Nee Minami..if the time comes, I want to adopt a kid that looks like you"
"Don't bring up that cabbage again Acchan." I pinched her cheek, making a bright red spot "But I want a kid that looks like you too, and we'll have a happy family. That's my dream."
"Then I should work hard and make that a reality" Acchan held my hand tightly

"Stay by my side forever Minami.."

"I will..I promise"

The moon shines brightly above us, witnessing our promise with each other.






this is a flashback ^_^
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
Post by: Archie28 on March 04, 2013, 05:43:41 AM
Takamina and Acchan being sweet and such  :heart:

nice update by the way...  :thumbsup
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
Post by: Elo on March 04, 2013, 06:09:25 AM
ahhh come on why flashback

I want to know what happens next

please update soon :bow:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
Post by: Haruko on March 04, 2013, 06:44:33 AM
jeje sexaddichan.. you are so agressive with takaboy..
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
Post by: Hii_chan on March 04, 2013, 09:57:54 AM
ahh.. they were so sweet :heart:
Acchan you always pervert :twisted:
and I want to know what will happen too
so please update soon
thanks foe update
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
Post by: cisda83 on March 04, 2013, 11:53:07 AM
The way they interact was so sweet...

Very nice flashback there

Can't wait to see more

Thank you for the lovely update

 :heart: :love: :inlove: :wub:
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
Post by: kahem on March 04, 2013, 12:21:36 PM
It's so cute Acchan want a child with Takamina~
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
Post by: stepk on March 04, 2013, 06:00:11 PM
so cute atsumina  :wub:
and a child would like be a cabbage.
that was really funny  :lol:

thanks

Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: whiningwillow on March 12, 2013, 04:46:33 AM
Chapter 15


Snow continues to fall across the vast horizon. The view from where I am standing was incredible, the city is covered with blanket of snow. Rooftops are clear as white, the roads, trees even the cars. The snow shines in the darkness of the city, the lights from the windows are nowhere near. I watch the tower from afar as it changes it's color from red to green, making patterns for the Christmas season. The snow continues to fall, it's not stopping, but some point in time it will stop, it will be forgotten and will be remembered when it falls again.

I love her..

There are times that I said to myself that I'll forget her eventually, that my love for her is like the seasons, it will fade, but I was wrong. I never stopped thinking about her..never stopped loving her. In my sleep, I still see her. In my room, I still feel her. In my mind, it's her. And in my heart, it's her. My body longs for every inch of her. Her warmth, her kisses, her embrace, her touch..her
everything.

Hi, hello, how are you? How are you doing? Are you all right? What are you doing lately? Are you busy? How's school? Your grades, how is it? How's your mom? Are you still eating well? What happened? To us?
I can't utter any single word. All these questions, they're all inside my mind. I'm helpless.

"A..Aacha...n.."

Acchan ran towards me and held me tightly with her arms. She's..she's crying.
"I..I'm sorry Minami.." her embrace tightens "I..I just can't lose you. Ever since that day, i can't eat, can't sleep..all I think about is you. In school, I can't bring myself up to talk to you. Every single day was tormenting. Do you know how hard it is to miss that someone you love? Look at me, I'm miserable, miserable without you Minami. I.."
"Why?" my eyes started to cry "You..why did you gave my song? It's mine right? You made it for me. Acchan..that's my song. I..I hate you.."
"Minami..you..you heard it?"
"I hate you.. I..hate it that I love you so much.."

I laid my head on her chest, I..I really miss her. Everyday is not normal without her, like there's something missing, like an artist without a brush. I loved her without second thoughts. I risked, I gave up anything. And now she's back, back into my arms again.
Now, the artist can paint again, paint upon the canvas that has been waiting to be filled with wonderful experience, our experience.

"Darn you..why do have make me wait for this long? You..you dummy.."
"Minami..this will never happen again..I promise"
"You..do you know how much I miss you? It was taking forever.."
"Me too.."

It was starting snow really hard. The wind is getting stronger and stronger. It looks like a snow storm is brewing up. The temperature is getting lower. I guess we should head inside.
"Acchan, let's go inside..it seems that the weather is not gonna be good any minute"
"Okay"

As soon as we got inside, Acchan pushed me on the couch. She went on top of me, she's on all fours.
"What are you doing Acchan?" I gasp for breath knowing what's gonna happen next "Stop.."
"Minami, it's freezing." Acchan stared at me "Minami..do you know how long I've waited for this. It's been months! Oh god, it's killing me.."
"Acchan.." I pulled her closer to me. I can feel her breathing heavily. "You never changed..dummy"
I kissed her like I've never kissed her before. It was wet, deep and romantic. She seems surprised by my sudden actions as she tries to break free and all.
"Mina..mi, wa..wait.." I pulled her forcefully restraining her movements.
"You said you have waited for this right? So stop and let me do it. This ain't gonna happen again if you don't let me"

"I just want to tell you, I love you Minami.."
"I love you too Acchan..shall we go back to where we left off?"
"Naughty cabbage girl"
"What did you say?"
"Lalala~~"
"Grrrrrrrrrr...I'll punish you tonight"

~~The day I met you, like a little flower dancing in the wind
Is far away
There were days when we hurt each other because we were still too young
But now they’re memories we can laugh at together

Nobody knows what’s at the end
Of this long journey
But these uncertain nights will never come again

We can keep walking forever
Together, now and forever
This love I clutch close to my heart
Will never change, this one unique
“I love you”~~







Epilogue

"Mama! Mama!" a cute girl runs to her mom, while holding a bunch of flower on her small tiny hand "Look at this, I'll give this to auntie"
"That was nice of you baby. Ask your mama to help you, okay?"
"Yes mama!" the girl runs to her another mom and tugs her white plaided skirt "Mama, I'll give this to auntie. Will you help me?"
"Oh sure my dear. Let's go"
The three walked hand by hand towards a tree in the middle of the field. The girl placed the flowers beside a big onyx marble piece on the ground.
"Mama, auntie's name was the same as mine. Why is that?"
"Because she's mama's good friend. She lived a good life my dear. I'm sure she'll be happy to see you if she was still here"
"So she's nice like me? So she's a good girl like me?"
"Yes and yes. Haha"
"Let's go everybody. Baby, say goodbye to your auntie"

The small girl waved at the onyx piece on the ground.
"Goodbye auntie Tomomi!"










this is the end of my fic..and i hope you guys like it ^_^

so how was it? :)
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: Haruko on March 12, 2013, 06:22:26 AM
Awesome fic! Aww cute mini tomo.. but i think that minami in takapapa :B but its ok :B love it!  :thumbup
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: Pdpond on March 12, 2013, 07:36:41 AM
Ehh! Why did they have baby? But still cute little tomo and  takapapa<3
Thank for awesome fic!!
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: cisda83 on March 12, 2013, 09:22:56 AM
Yeah... Atsumina is back together...

But sadly for Tomochin... she was alone when she died...

Minami didn't accompany Tomochin in her last hour of her time....

I can understand that Minami wanted to be with Atsuko... and she did not have obligation to take care of Tomochin...

But if I was Minami, I would want to be with Tomochin; be with her, try to love her even a little and try to make her happy in her last hour of her life.

So at least she could have a good dream before she was gone. (That's just my opinion, don't mean to offended you (whiningwillow) or anyone else)

Well, it was lovely fic...

Thank you for your great fic....

Can't wait to see more of your creation

 :wub: :inlove: :heart: :love:

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: Archie28 on March 12, 2013, 02:00:22 PM
ATSUMINA in the end :cow: :cow: :cow: :cow:

awww... they name their baby Tomomi...  :wub:

so Tomochin died  :cry:

Nice ending :thumbsup :thumbsup :thumbsup
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: Railgun96 on March 12, 2013, 04:12:09 PM
So tomochin died in the end.
 I like your story.
Keep up the good work. :thumbup
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: mae on March 12, 2013, 05:58:48 PM
It's a good fic thank you :)
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: kahem on March 13, 2013, 01:48:13 AM
Cute end but I'm sad for Tomochin T_T
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: whiningwillow on March 13, 2013, 04:58:47 PM
my stories are short compared to the others..but i'll try my best next time (thinking that there's a next time)

thank you again everybody for spending time reading this and leaving comments afterwards

thank you so much :)
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: Archer1992 on May 02, 2013, 03:12:18 AM
aw! Why tomochin dies u.u
a good FF
thanks ^_^
Title: Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
Post by: Dianalrs on February 03, 2015, 06:56:43 AM
Awww
so sad for Tomochin but I love the Atsumina  :heart:  :heart: