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Title: Sin & Punishment [Miyazawa Haru:Sins are forgiven. Agony as Punishment]
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on January 21, 2013, 11:59:53 AM
Hello bro Readers! this will be my first SaeYuki Fanfic so please Comment and Enjoy. And just like the others it's always a Short Chapter.

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File Name: BLACK and WHITE

Patient's Name:Kashiwagi Yuki

Age: 21 years old

Birthday:July 15 1991

Date Entered: August 18 20XX

Room No# : Rm.20

Mental Condition: Unstable

Physical Condition: Stable

Diagnosis: Self-Injury Dissorder,Hallucination,Multiple personality Dissorder(2) & Depression Dissorder.

Reasons:As her Mother said She Kept changing personalities and voice when she was a Child & she kept Talking to her own.
Due to Continues Bullying for the past 12 years she has been having a more agressive side Personality and has been Inflicting Pain
to herself With or without Concious, and along those years she has been Hallucinating a Figure that she describes 'My Twin'.
And Also due to the Fact her Father Died her condition worsen until she was put in the Hospital(Asylum).



*Beep* ...... *Beep* ....

The sound of a heart Monitor Echoes inside the room. The room has 1 bed, A drawer, A big Mirror and a Window over looking the city.
The color of the Room was White. White Walls,Bed sheets, Pillows. Everything was White. And there was a Girl Lying down on the bed

Wearing Also a White Hospital Gown, She looked like an Angel just sleeping.

*Beep*......... *Beep* .....

Kashiwagi Yuki the so called "Black" and also "Angel" she has been in the Asylum for nearly half a year due to her Condition.
She has been alone. No one to Talk to. No one to see... But her 'Twin'.




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I'm Gonna leave like This for a While, I wanna know if you Guys are curious that's all  :nervous
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on January 24, 2013, 01:32:58 PM
I wanna ask here um... Do you guys want me to continue this??
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: RenaChii on January 24, 2013, 01:49:14 PM
please continue~
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: Kazan on January 24, 2013, 01:55:35 PM
 :)
Yeah you have to continue
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on January 24, 2013, 02:59:23 PM
Well....While you readers wait for the Update please read this other FanFic I made.

http://forum.jphip.com/index.php?topic=34672.msg1144565#msg1144565 (http://forum.jphip.com/index.php?topic=34672.msg1144565#msg1144565)
http://forum.jphip.com/index.php?topic=34684.0 (http://forum.jphip.com/index.php?topic=34684.0)
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: ScarletWings on January 24, 2013, 05:06:50 PM
omg u're leaving with that huge cliffhanger???
of course i'm curious, sae hasn't even showed up yet omg lol
please continue this fic :D
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: wsama on January 24, 2013, 11:48:51 PM
Yes! Please continue this fic!! x3
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: kuro808 on January 25, 2013, 08:07:52 AM
This is very interesting
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on January 25, 2013, 10:21:14 AM
Again for the meantime please read my other Fafics while I try to update :)
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on January 25, 2013, 12:49:24 PM
and oh yeah here's one of my Fanfics too, an Atsumina one :)
http://forum.jphip.com/index.php?topic=34752.0 (http://forum.jphip.com/index.php?topic=34752.0)
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on January 27, 2013, 04:40:30 AM
H-h-hows it goin Bros? I'm back with the update  8) before that this story is based on vocalod's song "Tsumi to Batsu" or ""Sin and Punishment" this version is the Girl's point of view (The nico nico chorus version)

Sin and Punishment [PV] (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4wSJ7EQMKzA#)   <---- watch this and you'll know how the story goes.  :P

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"If you only had ears like mine, then I would sing a song to you....would you hear me...?"



Kashiwagi Yuki is now 21 Years old. She's been inside the Asylum For nearly half a year. She was sent there to be cured of what they think is Abnormal and what she thinks is Fine.
The Girl has Raven black hair, A slim silky smooth and white body, Her eyes are like her hair black but beautiful, But this Beauty was locked up in a room which is pure white not like her
Supposedly called 'Twin'. Yuki was a Kind Girl,Sweet,smart,Shy, and cheerful.her father died due to a cardiac arrest which took a more negative effect in her mental state.

Her 'Twin' is Like her but her personality differs. She is Negative,smiles or enjoys others misery, says the truth (the painful one). She is beautiful like yuki but Her heart is black and so are her

words.Buts sometimes she cares for Yuki, only when "HE" is around.

she always Hurts yuki with her words she makes her realize things negatively which leads to yuki locking up in her room and fights with each other until yuki cuts herself. Before she was sent to the Asylum she had a Relationship with a boy, the boy was also her bestfriend since middle school but until 4th Year in Junior high both confessed and started going out.

the boy was always a very Cheerful guy,Cheesy on words, Sporty,Smart,Protective and Truly Caring about Yuki.He'd always pick her up when they went to school and drop her off when they'll go home together. the boy Loves her so very much.Yuki's 'Twin' has grown fond of him and Lessens the pain towards yuki. They've been together for 3 months before she was sent to the asylum. but one day she almost committed suicide fro some reason then almost attacked her own family, reason why she was brought to the asylum.




Yuki Slowly wakes up,she opens her eyes and blinks for a couple of seconds soon she sat up.she slowly took off the blanket and left her bed. she went to the near by window. The heart monitor

kept on going, Yuki was attached with wireless patches for her heart this way she could roam freely within her Room but she has a stand and a morphine attached to her wrist where her veins are and where the blood flows stronger. she soon moved to mirror and stared at herself...


"I wish--" Yuki was Cut off by someone  Wearing a Black hospital gown and looks exactly like her.


 "You wish to see him...? hahahah don't make me laugh you no brainier, he's not coming not today not tomorrow not ever!"


Yuki Bit her lower lip just contain the sadness of the truth she has been told. she look at her "He's Coming...I know he'll come!"  the other one replied in a cold, cruel tone
"Your parents didn't come, your friends didn't come neither your so-called boyfriend will come! you keep on saying the same things over and over again!  he cheated on you! he lied to you! He has no reason to VI-SIT YOU!"
. Yuki covered her ears and drops on her knees.

"Shut up..."
"He's never gonna come!"
"Shut up...!"
"He doesn't love you anymore!!"
"Shut Up!"
"Oh wait...He NEVER LOVED YOU"
"Just shut up...!"
"He betrayed you! Played with your feelings! he looked at you like his own toy!"
"Shut up! Shutup! Shut up!!!"

Tears rolled down Yuki's cheeks.She becoming more paranoid each day that passes. she looks aroung for anything that she could use to calm her down. suddenly a shard of glass from the Mirror broke. she took the glass and slowly slashed her wrist (Far from the vain where one will die if it had been sliced or cut deeply). heavy breathing can be heard from her. and drops of blood flowed down to the floor soon she calmed down. she held her gown on the chest where her heart is. she looked up at the figure on the mirror. 'Why....' she said in her mind then the girl in the mirror said "Because it's fun...to see you die of misery hm~" she giggled then disappeared.Yuki Cried. 'H-he'll come...I know he will....' she thought.

A Nurse arrives with her Breakfast,but as soon as she saw her she quickly placed the food onto the table of the patient. she grabbed the near by Emergency kit and did first aid on her wrist. Yuki was spacing out. she didn't care if the nurse is there all she could think of his him.


----End of Part 1-----



So how was it? did you Like? if you guys did Please leave a comment  :hee:
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: kuro808 on January 27, 2013, 04:49:09 AM
I like the fact that the two sides meddle with each other.  One body two sides awesome :thumbsup
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on January 27, 2013, 08:08:31 AM
I'm Glad you Like it ^^
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: fuu_kun on March 01, 2013, 05:49:21 AM
Pwease continue. TwT
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: kiruchi on March 01, 2013, 07:32:24 AM
Who's the guy? And (i assume) that Yuki has an interacting dual personality?
Interesting. Pls. Update.
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on March 01, 2013, 12:50:05 PM
Sorry if I haven't updated this Fic  :prayers: :kneelbow: :on freeze: It's just that I'm Stuck with Studies  :on study:
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: fuu_kun on March 01, 2013, 06:30:22 PM
:cry: TwT dont forget le tokyo dome fanfic too :"D me love happy family <3
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: K-popJ-popAWESOMENESS on March 09, 2013, 09:58:34 PM
Please update~!!
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on March 10, 2013, 01:02:19 AM
I'll try to Update from 2 weeks from now since Finals are here and I
'm stuck studying  :on study:
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on March 18, 2013, 04:45:48 PM
"If you only had a Heart Like mine I would...fill it with my love...would you...Feel me...?"
 
 
It was now evening, yuki was in her bed asleep. But there is someone beside her. it's her 'Twin' . her 'twin' is considered BLACK in many ways.
Yuki always calls her 'Kuro-chan' because of it.
 
Yuki awoke at 2 am...Restless. her thoughts raced into her mind. Will he come? Does he still love me? What If I just Miss understood? Those were the many questions within her Worried little head as she stood and walked to the window to look at the night view,but once again her thoughts was disrupted
by Kuro... "Are you that damn Serious? hahaha don't make me crack a bone laughing...he left and he will forget you...so forget that so  called 'boyfriend' of yours!" . Yuki looked down and frowned...and just looked out of the window.
 
The Busy Streets, Lights of Cars still around even at that time. City Lights was illuminating Akihabara, but No Sound was heard
Within the Room, As Yuki Scans the Area she looked down and saw Him walking. She wanted to shout and she did.. "Haru!!! Haru!!!" She bangs the Window
Hoping he'd Notice her, "Don't waste your breath, even if he did see you he'd just walk away from you and never come back" Yuki ignored her and Continued. She drops down to the Floor on her knees and Kept banging on the Window.
 
"Haru! Please! Turn around!! I'm right here!! Please...." The boy Looked up. His ands were in his Pockets,his clothes were ruffled up and his hair was slightly a mess as if he went through a Struggle. He saw Yuki on her knees and crying.
 
"Haru!!" Yuki yelled... But he can do is close his Eyes shut tight...Bit his Lower Lip...and Run away from Yuki. Yuki cried more.... "Haru...please don't leave me here...Haru come back...I'm lonely..."
The tone of her voice softened and weaken....Then Kuro Sat beside her with a frown and soften eyes...Kuro is never Like this Except When she sees yuki In too much Pain since what yuki feels...She also Feels as well.
 
Kuro Strokes the Girl's hair and spoke in a soft voice...
 
"I told you..he's not Coming back for you...Even if he does come back even if you say 'I still Love you' ... Nothing Will ever change. He won't love you... He never loved US from the very start...So just Give it up...You saw him run right? so please...Let it go...You Can't go on like this...I Can't go on like this..." She hugged the Sorrowful girl and Yuki Hugged back and cried on the shoulder of her
Twin....
-----------After a few Hours---
 
*Heart Rate : 60 beats
 
The room was filled with Sun light due to the fact it's 8 in the morning, Yuki woke up with her Eyes slightly Sore because of crying last night...she found herself in the bed.
"H-how did I get here on my bed...?" then the door opened revealing a man wearing a white lab coat,glasses, under the coat he wore a long sleeved Polo that has a diagonal pattern. the cuffs were unbuttoned and was rolled up a bit,he also wore a necktie perfectly tied and it's pattern was black and silver,he also wore
Black slacks,belt and shoes to match his uniform.
 
"Oh good morning Kashiwagi-san" the man greeted Yuki with a smile as he entered the room with a tray of
Pancakes with butter and syrup and a glass of orange juice.
 
"Go-good morning Dr.watanabe...." she greeted him unsurely. "I made you some breakfast, it's your favorite" he said as he walked towards her. he placed the meal on a table beside her.
 
"How did you know it's my favorite meal every mornin doc?" she questioned him. "Your mother dropped by early this morning and told me to take care of you Like she always did to make feel a bit happier" He lied to her. The truth was Haru told him 2 in the morning but he had a scuffle with the security guards Watanabe talked to Haru then soon Haru left the facility.
 
"Oh I see..." Yuki said. "Well Eat up~ I'll be checking on you later" Watanabe said as she headed to the door.
"Thank you" She said "It was no big deal" Watanabe replied and left the room.Yuki Happily ate the Pancakes the doctor made....then she was overcome by someone...it was Kuro...
 
"that doctor...is hiding something from us....I don't trust him..." Kuro said in a cold like voice and yuki replied from inside "He seems to be a nice guy...I don't think he'd harm us..."

"Yeah...Right...It's like you said when you Met Haru...."

". . . " Yuki was Quiet then... "Well...Can I finish my Breakfast please...?" she asked her twin "Fine Whatever" then she lets Yuki eat in peace for once.
 
-----------After Breakfast----
*Heart Rate: 53 beats
 
Yuki was looking outside the window again,thinking...She then remembered something...
She walked towards her Bed and took something under her pillow...It was a Cat hat...it was given by Haru when
They first Went on a date.She Wears it on her head...then she remembered that...She'd always wear this when Haru and her goes on a date...
 
she fixes it and walked to the Mirror...soon she fixed a bit and place her hand on her chest....She remembers all those sweet moments they shared together...The laughter...Smiles...everything...but now her heart is filled with nothing more than empty space...She clutches her Hands on her chest...Her heart Slowed down...it beats heavily... Then in front of the mirror...was Kuro...Kuro's eyes filled with Bitterness...they were colder than her heart...a wicked smile appeared...then she Slaps Yuki hard... then Disappeared ...
 
"It hurts...It really hurts you know...haru...."

 
----------END OF PART 2-------------

Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: kuro808 on March 18, 2013, 05:17:57 PM
It seems like crazy game between two sides of the mind
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on March 19, 2013, 04:00:20 AM
@Kurosawa87 : Heeeeeeyup But if you watched the AMV of the story that I shared here you'll know the ending and the whole story :lol:
Title: Re: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: kuro808 on March 19, 2013, 04:03:10 AM
@Kurosawa87 : Heeeeeeyup But if you watched the AMV of the story that I shared here you'll know the ending and the whole story :lol:

I rather see it through writing :3

Posted by the mento Hawaiian

Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on April 25, 2013, 05:50:55 PM
Yay~! Finally I have the Update!! And this the last update since it's well the final part so...Enjoy!
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"If you hate me why don't you just kill me....And save me from this misery...if I can't earn your love...You don't need me...at all..."




*Heart rate : 55....




Yuki had a smile on her face...but that smile had covered her frown inside. She was standing
In front of a mirror looking at herself... it's been a year since she was in the asylum.

"I love you haru~" she said as she slightly tilts her head, her hand at her back.

'I hate You Haru' an evil smile was shone on the mirror...it was Kuro.

"I know you'll come"

'You won't even bother to see me you bastard'

Yuki touched the mirror and leans her forehead on it kuro did the same.

"I will forever love you/Despise you..."

"Miyazawa haru..." Yuki broke into tears as for Kuro...she was only smiling without care.


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"Hey let's do it....yeah let's try...Ready set go... Suicide."




*Heart Rate: 30...




A Piece of Glass falls off the Mirror.... She picks it up.. Yuki's eyes were Dead...emotionless and not caring
She Looks at her Wrist.....And smiles...

"This is how much I love/Hate you Haru..."

 voices were speaking at the same time... Yuki cuts her wrist again at the same place. but she does it over and over again.
Blood. "I don't have a choice now do I? ... If I kill myself...you'd never come.."





"It's not my Kind of game....But What Choice do I have..? after all...I'm nothing to you..."






Blood drips onto the floor. 12 Slashes on her Wrist one barely missing her vein.... she laughs, Soon stops...
She Lays her head down on the Bed and sits on the floor. she used her left arm as a pillow for her head as she thinks back of what had happened before
All of this mess.

Her eyes were


Then Kuro Wrote on the mirror by blood



"YOUR LOVE IS LOST"



she grabs the Stand where her Morphine hangs and Smash it onto the
Mirror..

Crack....



Once more.tiny shards falls off but she hits it harder and harder....the mirror breaks...pieces of glass
Flies off and hits the side of her cheek.She didn't care and keeps on breaking the mirror.
Bloody hands and a Insane smile...that's what she is now...

She stands sloppily....Holding the stand loosely....Blooddripd on the floor ...
The Mirror is broken. then she let's go of the stand...


*Heart Rate: 21....




She grabs one of the biggest piece of shard and stands in front of the mirrors Remaining
Piece... the top piece... she sees herself.... she takes her hair up and places the Shard under it....

 she cuts her hair...

Strands falls as her Hear beat slows down.... she puts her hands down... Left was holding the now cut off hair...the right was bleeding
She was Holding the Shard tight....


She let's them go.

Her Hands were bleeding...she looks at the broken mirror... and Sadly smiles

"I-I ...LOVED you ..." What came out of her eyes were not Tears....She cried Blood instead.
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"If I would hate you now...would you love me in return more than I loved you....?"













"The old me is gone....she's dead....She's not here anymore...she's gone...hey...it hurts you know...." "






*Heart Rate: 15....



Her heart beat slowing down....her breathing becomes heavy...Vision going black...all she could do was sit...And sob....

"I'm sorry..." a hug from behind...Yuki was hugged from behind... by a boy.. "H-haru..?"

"I'm sorry but...you were a MISTAKE..." a wicked smile was formed and Kuro was the one who spoke the whole time....

Yuki collapses on to the floor...Pale and weak...

---An hour later---


*Heart rate: 08...



She was Only Lying there

Not moving

Not Speaking



She was having a hard time to breathe Both her and her Alternate personality Lies motionless
Death was a few minutes away.

Pale white skin

Dry cold lips


and eyes that can barely see

Then someone Burst opens the door. "Yuki!!" It was Miyazawa Haru. Haru Ran towards her but stop at sight
of what has happened to her.

"Y-yuki..."

"..." His eyes Fixated on her. His lips are slightly open but as if Mute no words came out.

His eyes were Wide as if he saw a Ghost. His tears uncontrolbly fell down. He drps to his knees
Then moved towards her on his knees.

He cradled her....Yuki saw him...Crying....

"Hey...." she weakly said. "Yuki....I'm sorry...I really am...."

"You know...You never visited me not even once..." she stated...

"I tried to get in but the doctor and Security kept Me away! I've been struggling to just get in here...but I guess..."

"You were too late..." she said.

His tears won't stop falling. "Yuki I love you...I love you more than anything...more than anything in the world..." he hugged her tight.




*Heart Rate: 05...





"I'm sorry but....I gave up on you...." she sadly said.

"Yuki please don't say that, You know I love you...She kissed me but I had no Idea she'd do that! When I saw you running I slapped her....because I know I've just hurt you in the worst possible way..."





'I don't need reach your deafened ears anymore...and I don't need to Fill your empty heart...'





"Kashiwagi Yuki...I'm sorry...I know it's too late...But at least forgive me..."


"I forgive you...because All I need is that agony in your face...That's good enough for me...because I know, you still care for me."



*Heart rate: 02...



"In the end..." She smiled happily for the first time...Haru kissed her and she didn't resist but she Kissed back.

Then....


*Heart Rate: 00...



The monitor had a flat but high pitched sound...




She's Dead.




"..." Silecnce was all He could give then he saw a piece of glass .... he saw Kuro  writting something in blood..




"SEE YOU IN HEAVEN"



                                                            ------FIN-----

Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: kuro808 on April 25, 2013, 06:01:19 PM
Wow :O :O :O

Countdown to the final heartbeat and thus ending the fic :thumbsup
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: Shinoki on April 25, 2013, 11:58:55 PM
shock.......... kind of short...
but it was so epic!!
At first I had no idea who Haru was....
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: cisda83 on April 26, 2013, 10:49:03 AM
Ah... Yuki died....

Poor Yuki... why did she need to suffer like until like that....?

At least now she can stop tormenting herself...

Thank you for the ending...

Such a sad ending but it's a good story...

Thank you

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on April 27, 2013, 09:48:05 AM
I just Had to let yukirin Die :lol: it's short bu that's how the Song is plotted
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on August 18, 2013, 03:04:35 PM
HEY BROS! I'M BACK!! :D
And this time this fic will be on Sae's side, after the death of his beloved girlfriend! enjoy the intro!
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It's all my fault, if... If I... If I didn't meet with that girl...

That misunderstanding wouldn't have happened.


If I didn't shout at her...

Our anger would have been resolved...

Yuki... I-I'm sorry... I'm sorry for everything...

I did everything to try and visit you... but I couldn't...

They stopped me... They kept on stopping me from seeing you...

I regret everything, Every each fault I've done

You know... It hurts... Losing you. It hurts...

Now, I know how you felt. When I wasn't there by your side...
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment
Post by: cisda83 on August 18, 2013, 10:04:03 PM
Interesting... New short prologue of new fic huh...

Great... Stuff there..,

Can't wait to see the next chapter

Thank you

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: Sin & Punishment [Miyazawa Haru:Sins are forgiven. Agony as Punishment]
Post by: mayuyuXlyukirinlover13 on December 21, 2013, 03:43:02 PM
Ok! so.. I almost forgot about this. Sorry about that. But anyways, here, have an update! :D
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I held on to your body, hugging it tight. I feel the guilt growing in me.

I shouldn't have done it. I shouldn't have met her....

If I didn't meet her, this whole broken mess wouldn't happen. You wouldn't die like this.

My hands, my face, my clothes... Are stained by your blood.  I can't stop these tears from falling.

"Yuki, please, don't leave me like this!" I shouted. "TELL ME THIS IS A LIE! TELL ME IT'S A JOKE!" I added.


Shards of glass was on the floor. The bed has been flipped and ruined. Some areas of the room Are filled with blood.
The walls were smeared by your blood. I saw something under the table near the bed. It was... A hat. I remember that hat...
It was the hat I bought you on our first date, I remembered how you really wanted it...

I looked at your lifeless face... Your skin was paler than snow... Your lips have turned cold and blue...



I cradled you in my arms. Then...


The doctor came in.



He stood behind me as he watches me weep and hold you. I looked at the Doctor....

I gently placed you down.

I glared at him.... I stood up.


"You could have saved her..." I told him. he was silent. "You're a God damn doctor... YOU HAD THE POWER TO SAVE HER!!"
I added as I clutched his collar and held him up.


"I'm sorry..."

"YOUR SORRY CAN'T BRING HER BACK TO LIFE!!"



I shouted as I shoved him to the wall. Security and medical staffs came in. The guards took me off and away from the doctor.
I tried to resist them as I shout.


"IF YOU HAD ONLY LET ME IN HERE!! IF YOU HAD GAVE ME ACCESS ON VISITING HER!! NONE OF THIS CRAP WOULD OF HAPPEN!!"

The guards forcibly drags me out, your body was being carried to the morgue.

If only I was here

If only I could have visited her

None of this...


would of happen....


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