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AKB48 Fanfics => AKB48 Fanfics => Topic started by: m00nchild on May 08, 2013, 10:12:16 AM
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Takamina a highschool girl that go all out on doing anything.
Acchan is a witch that like to play,
Sado a Ace of the devil clan who royal to her lord,
KojiHaru a normal highschool girl.
Yuko a flame devil who likes to go to the human world,
Tomochin an Angel who always against the rule and like to be cool,
Tomomi a witch that always help Acchan,
Gekikara a Devil who just like to kill,
Rena a high school girl who shy but kind.
Jurina a energetic highschool girl known as Rena's younger sister,
Centre the Ace of angel clan whos the most powerful angel,
Yuki a high school girl that always kind and friendly,
Mayu 3rd ace angel who love to taking care of a lot of things,
Black a devil who partner with Gekikara,
(will have more character)
this is my first try,
dozo yoroshiku onegaishimasu!
I try to do my best for it.
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WORLD of ANGEL & DEVIL
Interesting...
Lots of characters...
So Rena and Geki are two separate people... the same for Center and Jurina... and also Black and Yuki
Can't wait to see how you are going to start the story
Thank you for the intro
:twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
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Great cast of characters
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Interesting characters :ding:
Gekikara is seperated from Rena and also Center - Jurina, Black - Yuki :on gay:
How about Nezumi - Mayu :wahaha:
Angels, Devils and Witches :nya:
I think your fic will have a lot of twist since the couples were in diferrent side :kekeke:
Atsumina: Acchan is a witch while Takamina is a human
WTomo: Tomomi's a witch and Tomochin's an angel
Mayuki: Mayu's an angel and Yuki's a human
I can't decide WMatsui yet :frustrated:
But after all, I think it'll be an interesting fic :on lol:
Update soon, please :kneelbow:
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Best cast ever~
Devil and Angel... Human too :D
Great prologue and characters :w00t:
So what do we have, Geki&Rena; Yuki&Black; Jurina&Centre...
Minami as a student and she'll meet witch Acchan (somehow I dont think it'll be Atsumina :?)
Sado sama :twothumbs
WTomo???
So it gonna be GekiBlack, and WMatsui are related
No WMatsui :cry: but Sado and Centre, two aces of different clans lol
Ha Mayuki? Mayu loves Yuki? See many AngelxHuman out there XD
You said it would be more characters, hope to see JurinaxSomeone pairing :roll:
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looks interesting :D
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lookes interesting hehe update
who do you pair up I hope Atsumina and Kojiyuu
but it is your decision so do as you like hehe
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i hope kojiyuu atsumina and tomotomo :cathappy:
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Rena - Geki, Black - Yuki, Center - Jurina they are two seperate people or they are one???
I hope they are two people different. Because I like Geki - Yuki is a one couple and Mayu - Center too.
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@ALL : thanks for the support, I will be update the 1st chapter on friday (GMT +8),
And I will try to update new chapter at every friday (GMT +8),
hope I can do it! But I will try my best with it,
if any confusing or not understanding please let me know,
due that I write there will be more character,
if everyone who wanted which character to be add in please inform me,
I will try my best to add in!
But I would like to let everyone know that I'm not good on love story, and I will try my best to write a good one.
@noel nguyen : Rena,Yuki & Jurina is human, Black,Geki is devil, Center is Angel...
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this sounds so good :deco: please update soon :cow: :bow:
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OMG, Whattttttt? But this ok, I love it :D
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Chapter 1
The War
Devil Side ;
Devil Lord (D.L) : the time has come the war that I waited for 300 years.
Sado : My lord the angel seem haven't prepare for the war yet, should we strike them first.
D.L : Sado my dear dont be too rush, we need to do some planing before we strike.
Gekikara : hehehee~ my lord why we need to plan? we should just strike in and KILL all the Angel.
Black : I agree with Geki my lord, we should just rush in and Kill all of them.
Sado : BLACK! when did you come in?
Black : Before Geki here I already here.
D.L : All my dear, u didnt known well of the Angel Lord (A.L), he is not a stupid angel.
Sado : My lord, What should we do?
Angel Side;
Angel Lord (A.L) : My dear Angel have you prepare for the war?
Centre : My lord our angel have well prepare for the war comes.
Tomochin : My lord seem that devil have more troops then we have, should we do a sneak attack?
Mayu : Dont worry Mayuyu will take care of all the injury troops~
A.L : Mayu you was very kind but war is not suitable for you.
Centre : Lord is right, Mayu you should stay in the palace.
Mayu : But I want to fight too~
A.L : When the time comes you will fight.
(A reporter come in)
Reporter : Report My lord the devil have ready to strike in, they already grouped infront of the place level 1 defence, at least have 7000 troops, report finish.
A.L : Annous to the level 1 citizen call them retreat to level 2, and level 1 defence team keep defence kill them as much as possible.
*20 minutes later*
Reporter : report My lord, Level 1 defence have lost, we lost 500 troops, report finish
A.L : how many unit they lost?
Reporter : around 1500 unit my lord!
A.L : prepare for battle, Centre you bring 1500 troops with strike them from the east, Tomo you take 1500 troops strike them from the west, we cannot be fail.
Tomo & Centre : Yes My lord.
*meanwhile in the battle field*
Geki : heehee~ okotteru? *slice*(angel screem)
Black : Geki dont over do it, remember what D.L told us.
Sado : Black, watch your back! *shoot a arrow to the one who attack Black*
Black : Thanks, Sado!
Sado : Black dont be too careless, we are striking their palace.
*flashback*
Sado : My lord, What should we do?
D.L : My dear, as the A.L I know we will lure us to strike them all out, after that close the way we retreat after that and clear us off. Secure your back for retreat if they overcome us.
Sado,Black & Geki : yes, my lord.
D.L : prepare for the attack, Sado you bring 3000 with you strike from the front, Black & Geki bring 2000 guard for the left and right in case there is a sneak attack.
*back to the Battlefield*
(meanwhile when attacking in the level 2 defence)
*BOOM*
Sado : Is a TRAP!! TEAM FALL BACK!!
Centre : seem that A.L plan is working.
Geki : hee~hee~ not so fast~
Centre : GEKI!! (dash, give a hit on Geki right face make her fly 10 meter far)
Geki : hee~hee~ Nee Okotteru? (draw out her deathscythe out)
Centre : Over this 50 years we have found each others, keep fighting reach others for so many years, you still haven’t change at all, Today I will take revenge for the angel that killed by you. *ARGGG!!* (draw out her sword)
*in other side of battle field*
Tomochin : *cough**cough* this kind of appear is so uncool
Troops : General there is the enemy!
Tomochin : I KNOW THAT! prepare to die devil! (Wear her glove)
Black : Watch your mouth angel. (at the back of Tomochin)
when Tomochin turn her view suddenly feel a hit on stomach. Black give her a sidekick make Tomochin fly 5m far.
Troops : General!!
Black : What u wanted to do ANGEL? (draw her dual dagger)
Tomochin (while standing up) : wow... you was fast, but I wont lose in speed too. (whisper)*seal release 40%*
Suddenly Tomochin dissapear, was infront of Black and give a punch on Black but Black reached fast enough to block the attack, due that Tomochin glove was not a normal glove it have boom effect, and *BOOM* (the glove wont hurt it own owner)
Black get boomed and step back around 2m.
Black : Not bad, What's your name angel?
Tomochin : Tomochin, What's about you devil?
Black : you don't need my name, CAUSE YOU GOING TO DIE SOON!!! (Dash to Tomochin)
Tomochin : YOU JERK (Dash to Black too)
*both of them went to a highspeed dual*
Devil & Angel troop cant even see who was in the upperhand.
*back to Centre & Gekikara*
Centre : ARG!!! ATTACK!!!
Geki : hee~hee~ go kill as much as you guys want my little devil~
Troops : YAH!! CHARGE!!
Centre : I wont let you go Geki!!
Geki : nee~nee~ okotteru? (lick the blood on her scythe)
Centre : YOU MONSTER!! (whisper) *Seal Release 40%*
In a blink of eye Centre already reach infront of Geki and used Inferno Slash,make Geki wound very badly.
Geki : hahaha~ nee okotteru? (swing her scythe around have killed few angel & devil troops, and her wound have regen)
Centre : *stun* how come you kill your own troops!
Geki : hahaha~ see that I have to go all out~ hee~hee~
Centre : I will get revenge for those angel who die in your hand! (dash to Geki)
Geki : hee~hee~ blood is what I seek for~ (dash to Centre too)
*both of them have a powerful blow battle*
Those troops who around them sudden burst because of the pressure.
*back to the front gate*
Sado : Seem that lord plan was going well so we can do it, CHARGE!!
Suddenly a lot of laser beam to Sado area,Sado evade those laser beam but kill some devil troops.
Sado : whose there?
Mayu : Watanabe Mayu, the leader of Magical Team!
Sado : Just a tiny magician, eat this ARROW RAIN.
Mayu : team A use electronic shield protect the city, team B heal those wounded troops, I have a battle to do.
Mayu cast some thunder to strike Sado, but Sado fast enough to evade.
Sado : you tiny! (shot multi bomb arrow)
Mayu use magic shield block all the arrow and return fire with ice bolt.
*both having a range battle ARROW VS MAGIC*
-TBC-
not understand or too short. writing sytle not good enough please let me know,
I will try to make it better,
please criticize my fiction... I like bad comment!
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The first attack was pretty much a combination of melee and magical aspects.
The concept whoever does win will suffer more casualties than expected. :nervous
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it's written like how I usually write drabbles....
so it's a bit strange, but I got really interested...
but yeah... angels and devils are old people oba-chan.......
so humans don't show up til later.....?
gekikara rock!
tomochin is speed? I always got the hot blooded girl in my head in those action fanfic cuz of shibuya...
Black is interesting~
It's like the opening of an RPG though....
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All character in this fic, they are all female or male and female??
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Very interesting fic there
Good dialogs... but no detail whatsoever about the actions or the plots...
just a simple sentence here and there.... I want more detail...
It's like drabbles...
Or it's like a trailer of movie...
But very exciting when reading the story
Different from most of the fic that I've read...
Anyhow, can't wait to find out what happen next
Thank you for fic...
:twothumbs :twothumbs
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Oh! War between Angel and Devil in the first chapter :on spit:
Very interesting :on gay:
Tomochin was speed like Black :shock: I thought she'll use fire :wahaha:
Mayu uses Magic and fight with Sado who uses Arrow :ding:
Gekikara's and Center's fight too awesome :on GJ:
So they've fighted each other for 50 years, so long :grr:
And who's the angel that Gekikara'd killed? :dunno:
Can't wait to continue reading about the Angel's and Devil's War :tantrum:
Update soon, please :kneelbow:
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this so exciting :cathappy:
mayuyu is magical girl woohoo! :cow:
oh my geki is scary :shocked that poor poor angel :sweatdrop:
thanx for the update :deco: :bow:
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it's pretty interesting
but it need a little bit more detail
'cause when i read it i kinda confuse a little
but in the end it still nice
good job for it :thumbsup
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@kurosawa : thanks for the support and comment. Thanks for the comment
@shinoki : erm.. tomochin not really in speed... Thanks for the comment
@noel nguyen : Yups, all character is female, any suggest for it? Thanks for the comment
@cisda : I will try to change the writing style, thank for the comment.
@leEwẬy : erm... the angel that Geki kill just a normal troops, you know that devil wont old, they not ordinary creature. Thanks for the comment
@mayuki_daisuki : Actually i wanted to write Geki more Bloody! Thanks for the comment
@Rena-chan Daisuki : what detail need to add in? can let me know? Thanks for the comment
@Silent Reader : Hope you guys can comment too, i would like to improve more!
Chapter 2
*Human World*
Yuki : Morning NyanNyan, hows your night?
Kojiharu : Ah~ morning Yuki, hmm~ is a great night.
Takamina : Even in the morning you are still that slow. Nyan Nyan
Yuki : Ah! Good morning Takamina-san~ didn’t saw you there.
Rena : Good morning, everyone~
Yuki,Takamina & Kojiharu : Good morning, Rena~
Yuki : Rena, have you done your homework?
Rena : ya, I done it all.
Yuki : Really? Can I borrow it?
Rena : go ahead. Kojima-san you seem tired.
Kojiharu : huh~ did I?
Takamina (knock NyanNyan) : wake up! You air head!
Kojiharu : Itai!! That hurt Takamina~
Yuki : ya minna, do you realize that the weather of this few days was weird?
Others : yups.
Takamina : by the way, Rena the person behind you are?
Rena : Ah! Forgot to introduce, Matsui Jurina my younger sister~ From now on she will follow us to the school as well.
Yuki : EH!!!! Rena you have a sister?
Rena : well, even we are sisters but we have no blood related,
Takamina : what do you mean that not blood related?
Rena : well you know that my mother have pass away right
Yuki & Takamina : ya.
Rena : And my dad remarried right?
Yuki & Takamina : Oh~ I see.
Kojiharu : then?
Yuki : = =lll
Takamina : BAKA!! Which means that Jurina is the daughter of Rena’s new mother! That why she didn’t have any blood related.
Jurina : ………
Rena : Jurina~ dun worry I will always take care of you like a real sister.
Yuki : Jurina~ dun worry about it, Rena’s sister equal is our sister too.
Jurina : Hai!
Takamina : everyone, we think we have to walk faster, IS ALMOST LATE!
Yuki : what the time now?
Rena : 7.55am.
Yuki : what times is our class start?
Takamina : 8am.
Yuki : OMG!!! Fast fast!! We are late.
Takamina : let’s run.
Others except Kojima : OH!!!
*start running*
Takamina : BakaNyan stop your day dreaming and start running we are late!
*everyone running to the school*
Acchan : They was cute~ *suddenly came out from a light pole*
Tomomi : Acchan!! Granny looking for you.
Acchan : Demo~ I haven’t done yet~
Tomomi : NO BUT! Go back!
Acchan : Demo~ Demo~
*Tomomi have pull Acchan away*
*Witch House*
Acchan : Granny u looking for me?
Granny : Yes my dear~ where have u been?
Acchan : I went outside for a walk.
Granny : I have to go to euro to visit your cousin, so I want u take care of this place, and Tomomi please have take care of Acchan ok?
Tomomi : Yes, Granny.
Acchan : Granny that unfair, how come u call Tomomi take care of me? I can take care of myself.
Granny : Don’t think that I don’t know what you did outside?
Acchan : hmm!!
*BOOM* (Granny have leave the party)
Acchan : Granny have gone…
Tomomi : what do u wan to do then?
Acchan : go in granny room and see what can I play~ ^^ (on the way to granny room)
Tomomi : Careful there are a lot things that very dangerous Acchan! (follow Acchan)
Acchan : don’t worry don’t worry.(went in Granny room)
(Acchan accidently pressed a button) *Kacak*
Tomomi : Acchan! What have u done?
Acchan : Huh?
Tomomi : you have pressed the button!
Acchan : EH!!!! (looking left & right) But nothing have happen.
Tomomi : you right, please be careful. We better leave this room alone.
Acchan : but I wanted to explore more about this room.
Tomomi : no way! is way too dangerous, granny call me to take care of you.
(Tomomi pull Acchan out of the room)
*Back to School*
ALL (breathing) : huh.. huh.. lucky we reach in time.
Yuki : Minna~ I don’t think we are lucky enough.
Others : huh? (look to the right side)
Teacher : girls , GO TO YOUR CLASS NOW!!
ALL : HAI!!!!
Takamina : By the way, Sensei you look fat..
(all rush to the class)
Teacher : TAKAHASHI !!
*In the class*
Takamina : phew~ the teacher haven’t reach yet.
Kojiharu (still breathing) : I have to get a sit first.
Yuki : NyanNyan you have to work out more.
Rena : Kojima-san what Yuki say was right.
*sound of thunder*
Takamina : Seem have to rain again.
Others : haih~
*teacher come in*
Takamina : stand~ bow~ good morning teacher.
Sensei : is time to check the attendance, Takahashi Minami.
Takamina : Hai!
Sensei : Matsui Rena.
Rena : Hai!
Sensei : Kashiwagi Yuki.
Yuki : Hai!
Sensei : Kojima Haruna.
Class : ……..
Sensei : Kojima Haruna.
Class : ………
(Rena , Yuki & Takamina look at the NyanNyan)
(Takamina pitch NyanNyan)
Kojiharu : ITAI! ITAI! ITAI!
Sensei : Kojima Haruna are you sleeping?
Kojiharu : (blur answering) Yes, sensei.
(Rena, Yuki & Takamina face palm)
Sensei : KOJIMA HARUNA STAND OUTSIDE THE CLASS!!
(Kojima Haruna still don’t know what have happened and stand outside)
*while Kojiharu standing outside the class*
Rena : Takamina-san please help Kojima-san
Takamina : How I help?
Yuki : think a way to help.
Sensei : Class! We have a new transfer student here. COME IN!
(Jurina come in to the class)
Yuki & Takamina : EH!!
Sensei : Please introduce yourself.
Jurina : Hai! Matsui Jurina dozo yoroshiku!
Class : MATSUI?? (look at Rena)
Rena : (“.)?? (.”)??
Jurina : (saw Rena in the class) NEE-SAN!! ( wave)
Rena : (face palm)
Class : NEE-SAN??
Sensei : yes class, Jurina is Rena younger sister and now will have class with us. CLASS START NOW… take your note out.
Class : Hai !!
*back to witch house*
Acchan : Tomomi~ stop pulling me
Tomomi : Gomen Acchan, this is Granny order.
Acchan : Tomomi~ I saw something interesting this morning~
Tomomi : What is it?
Acchan : I saw few human who on the way to the school~
Tomomi : That normal.
Acchan : no is not! I saw them run so fast, and in 5 of them there is a midget, she so cute~
Tomomi : After that?
Acchan : hrm…. So I decide to go to school as well.
Tomomi : NO WAY!!
Acchan : WHY??
Tomomi : Once those human know that you are a witch that will be way too much trouble , and if Granny know this I will be very DEAD! And you will be grounded as well.
Acchan : I don’t care, I will go register on tomorrow.
Tomomi : Acchan!!
(Acchan have leave the house)
-TBC-
Sorry for my bad english,
Please comment, I stuck with my chapter 3,
I need more IDEA!
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Ah... Haruna is really an airhead... :lol:
Ah... Jurina is Rena's new mom daughter... And she has lots of sisters... from all Rena's friends... :love:
Atsuko is also a bit clumsy... Even the granny asking Tomomi to take care of Atsuko... :sweatdrop:
And indeed Atsuko is VERY clumsy... Atsuko blew the house accidentally... Poor Tomomi and Granny...
Eh.. Jurina is in thier class... I thought she is a younger one... how can she is in the same class?
Is she like skipping classes... because she is a genius?
Ah... Atsuko wants to enroll to school... because she has a crush on Minami...
Yeah... what's going to happen with Minami and Atsuko?
What Tomomi is going to do... would she enroll also to keep an eye on Atsuko?
Can't wait to find out
Thank you for the update
:twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
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This is rather interesting for chapter 2
Poor Nyan :lol:
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i like this chapter more than the 1 chap
so good job there :twothumbs
can't wait to see ur next update
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Oh nyan-nyan what are we going to do with you :smhid
man this story is interesting keep updating :cow:
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Started really good! :cathappy:
I have many questions but i rather wait and not disturb you asking!! :nervous
Good Job!!! Can't wait for the next :cow:
please update soon! :D
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? ok, so tomochin aint speed?
Takamina~~~ kawaii~~
lol, my pace kojiharu!!
Jurina was soooooo cute
so they're the same age? Wmatsui that is...
hrm.....
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Haruna is always an air-head LOL :hiakhiakhiak:
Oh, Acchan has already fallen in love with Minami after saw her :hehehe:
She'll enter the school with Tomochin, right? :dunno:
Poor Tomochin, she has to take care of Acchan, who could blow the house away although it just an accident :stoned:
Jurina is Rena's step mother daughter and they become sister :on lol:
She's the same class as Takamina, Yuki, Rena and Haruna :on gay:
Then it means she's the same age as them or she just a genius, who skipped class :wahaha:
Can't wait to see what'll happen to them :kekeke:
Update soon, please :kneelbow:
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harunyan always an air head :nervous
what tomomi will do? keep eye on acchan?
your fic is so interesting :twothumbs
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@cisda83 : well Jurina is same age with Rena just that her birth date is few month later then Rena. about Atsuko & Takamina still need to wait a bit longer~
@kurosawa87 : I will try to make it more interesting, thanks for the comment.
@Rena-chan Daisuki : Thanks for the comment, I try to updated more.
@POPCAT : should we help her??
@cmze : I rather you ask me those question so I can have more idea to arrange the scene~
@Shinoki : well Tomochin is good the close range so that she wont be bad in speed but not specialized.
@leEwẬy : for Acchan maybe just interest with Takamina~??
@ptrd3009 : thanks for the comment. I will do it more better?
@Silent Reader : Thanks for reading the Fic, Hope you can comment as well to give me more idea to cont this fic.
Chapter 3
*Meanwhile in the War*
The battle of Sado & Mayu is tier, Sado have few wound and Mayu is tired.
This Magician is quite strong Sado think in mind.
If this battle continue my magic point will use up too Mayu think in mind.
Even both of them is wounded and lack of stamina, they still fight hard for the sake of their clan, Mayu cast a hundred ice bolt in one cast towad Sado but sudden came out a fire wall surround Sado block all the ice bolt.
Sado say, Yuko you are late.
Yuko reply, Gomen , I just came back from other mission!
Yuko ask, Sado are you kidding me? You are our top and you losing to a magician kid?
Sado reply Yuko we been battling for few hour, and now you come act up mighty?
Yuko joke Sado~ come on~ Just joking.
Sado yelled YUKO watch out! Sado cover Yuko with her body and get stab by few spear.
Yuko yelled Sado! SADO! YOU BASTARD ANGEL!!
Yuko cast a spell and sudden a meteor came from nowhere rushing to the angel palace
Mayu yelled Team A harder your shield, Team B prepare cast shield magic in case that team A shield can’t hold this stone. Stupid midget make the battle became more harder Mayu think in mind.
*Black & Tomochin battle*
After they having few hour of high speed battle, their troops was watching their battle. And both of them have back off for few meter. While the two of them have stop the battle, and taking breath those troops have start to charge to enemy troops and start the battle.
Tomochin say it while taking breath is that all you got devil?
Black answer do you want to test?
Tomochin dash to black give her a left straight and a right cross, but Black is fast and dough the punch while black evaded the right cross, Tomochin quickly turn her body give a sidekick to black, make black fly 5 m far, due that a chance Tomochin dash to Black and hold on her shoulder use her knee keep hiting Black stomach for 5-6 times then give a turn around kick make Black fly top and she use a rising sun punch but sudden went in a dark area that can’t even see anything, she just feel the pain of getting sliced, few minute later the dark area was gone and she saw black was in front of her. While she wanted to dash to Black, Black was gone once she realize Black already at the back of her and give her a deep cut on her back, while Tomochin losing her strength she quickly catch Black hand and give her a deadly blow that wounded Black badly, Black get hit by the punch and kick Tomochin away, trying to retreat but suddenly came out dark hole and suck in them in, due that Tomochin have no strength to fight back she just get suck in by the dark hole. Black use all her strength to escape from the dark hole with the wounded body but she success to escape from it.
*Other side Gekikara & Centre Battle*
Geki swing her scythe around and killed a lot of devil and angel, she keep laughing while she swing and her scythe involve to a black katana, Geki talk to her sword, hee~ hee~ you have eaten enough? Or you need more? Centre can’t hold her anger anymore rush to Geki with her first strike the inferno stab ( a fire straight stab attack), Geki block her attack and use a moon slice( A very fast turn around slice) return fire, Centre quicky back off and jump use the bowling bash( A very powerful strike from above), Geki use a Rise Demon (a force attack from below to above) to hit back, both of them was back off by the skill pressure, and they rush to each again, Centre use a nine dragon striking(An attack pattern like having nine dragon fly around) and Geki use a blade tornado(An tornado that create by slice) while both skill knock together they get wounded badly and taking breath but Centre don’t let Geki rest and dash to Geki using phantom slash ( an illusion slash which create a illusion dash to the opponent and slash from the back). When Centre slash Geki, Geki suddenly became some smoke, and far away from Centre and preparing a energy blast (something like cero in bleach manga/anime). Once Centre saw Geki was preparing the shot she quickly keep her sword and draw out her divine shield dash to Geki and prepare to take that shot head on. Geki saw Centre rushing toward her with the divine shield, she collect back her energy and blink to the back of Centre, with that move catch Centre careless, while Centre realize Geki was behind her already receive a critical stab by Geki, she kick Geki away make Geki pull her sword out from her wound. Nee~ okotteru? Geki asked, Centre didn’t give any reply. Nee~ okotteru? Geki ask again, Centre keep silent. Centre concentred on her power try to heal her bleeding wound, But sudden came out a dark hole keep suck in everything into the hole when Geki saw that dark hole suck in all the thing inside she retreat from it, but Centre don’t give a chance for Geki retreat , She dash to Geki stab her from the back due that Geki was concentrate on retreat didn’t realize Centre was there, After Centre stab Geki she quickly lock Geki with her body and don’t give Geki a chance to move and both of them is close to the dark hole, at that time Black saw the situation quickly dash to Geki try to pull her out but the dark hole power was to strong with the strength she got and her body was hurt badly. After that, the 3 of them is suck in by the dark hole.
*Back to the front door*
There is a dark hole that suck in everything when Sado saw that she react quickly command all the devil to retreat but she was get helped by Yuko while retreat because of the wound with her, Yuko quickly grab Sado and retreat. Both side have lost large amount of soldier then they expected because of the dark hole.
*Devil Kingdom*
Report my lord we have failed, we even lost 2 general and large amount of soldier, said Yuko.
WHAT?? What have happen in the battle field? Ask D.L
My lord we are in the battle try our best to defeat those Angel but suddenly it came out a dark hole keep suck things in, Geki & Black cant escape from the dark hole and get suck by it. Said Yuko
Dark hole?? How about Sado is she get suck by the dark hole as well? Ask D.L
No my lord, Sado was hurt badly because she protect me and get stabbed by few spear from the angel soldier, and that dark hole came out from nowhere keep sucking things, Said Yuko.
Where Sado now? Is she alright? Ask D.L
Yes my lord, Sado now was taken care by the medic team now, she be alright. Said Yuko
That great! Yuko you should go get some rest. Said D.L
Yes my lord, I take my leave from here. Said Yuko (leave the room)
Dark hole huh… I think I should do something to find out this dark hole.(D.L think in mind)
*Angel Palace*
Lord the battle is over and we have a lot of soldier wounded and a large amount and 2 general was MIA say Mayu to A.L
WHAT!! Tomochin & Centre was MIA? Quick! Send 5 searching team to find both of them back. Said A.L
Is useless my lord, they was suck in by a dark hole that came from nowhere it. Said Mayu.
A dark hole that came from nowhere? Ask A.L
Yes my lord, a dark hole that came from no where that suck them in and lot and lot of soldier~ Said Mayu.
Oh I see, Don’t mind Tomo & Centre first, what we need to do first is rebuild the palace and take care of those wounded soldier. Said A.L
All the wounded soldier was taken care by medic team it will be fine soon, and the builder is now repair and rebuilding the palace. Said Mayu
That a great job Mayu, So you go take some rest once you done came to me and we do some research about the dark hole, we must find Tomochin & Centre back. Said A.L
Yes lord, I take my leave from here! Said Mayu.
-TBC-
Sorry for my bad english,
Which writing style is better?? Chp1 & 2 or Chp 3??
I wondering for chapter 4, should I go with human world or devil world?
IF any reader wanted to add any character in this fiction please let me know,
Cause I'm thinking to add some character inside this fic but i have no idea who should I add in,
Please comment more, because I have no idea how to continue, maybe now my brain already JAM!!!
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Nope You're good ~
, After Centre stab Geki she quickly lock Geki with her body and don’t give Geki a chance to move and both of them is close to the dark hole, at that time Black saw the situation quickly dash to Geki try to pull her out but the dark hole power was to strong with the strength she got and her body was hurt badly. After that, the 3 of them is suck in by the dark hole.
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What the fish?
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The black hole outta nowhere :nervous
This is beyond imagination although what will it send it to
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Great action again.... :thumbsup
Tomochin, Centre, Geki & Black were sucked into coming to the real world huh...?
Yeah... how are they going to learn how to live among humans....?
Is it like in 'Hataraku Maou-sama!' anime?
They need to find jobs to live... while waiting to have enough energies to go back to their world?
Can't wait to find out more
Thank you for the update
:twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
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Lots of action scenes :on woohoo:
Where did that black hole come from? :dunno:
Both A.L and D.L don't know about it :stoned:
Where did it suck Tomochin, Center, Black and Gekikara to? Human world? :wahaha:
Mysterious :OMG:
Wonder when'll the couples meet each other? :kekeke:
Anyway, update soon, please :kneelbow:
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well still i like ch.2 better 'cause it's more understandable
but ch.3 get a lot more improvement than ch.1
but still a little bit confusing
but nice update anyway :thumbsup
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I can't wait to see where they'll go!! :grin:
Welk now that i read that chapter i only have two questions :oops:
Are they related? I mean Rena Gekikara and everyone? sorry if my question is stupid! :nervous
Just that i don't get it? And about the "Love interest" how it will go?" :oops:
Great fights!! :cathappy:
Well i will wait everything gets it way! :grin: