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Title: Homeless|Atsumina| Chapter 2 in progression | Continuation Announcement!
Post by: ZorxCemoon on October 31, 2013, 12:50:43 PM
Good evening guys, Its been a while since I last posted, and I would like to apologize for posting another thread, since I never once actually completed a chapter story, however this would be rather short, around 5 chapters, I would try to complete it as soon as possible.

Children story and Zorxie-chan storytelling hasn't been abandoned, I have far too much ideas to passed it away.

Bloodshed would also be starting, sorry again for the delay.

But here is another Zorxie-chan chapter story: Homeless (I hate using the word homeless, it's rather rude, but that's the only name I could think of)

Any mistakes please, message me, I would give you guys a kiss in return if you want:P

x

Homeless: Prologue


Living in Gliendale, wasn't particularly special, I have lots of friends from school, but none really made me felt a connection, Neither my best friend nor my peers, they were all great, but I wasn't myself around them.

My attitude and persona is completely different when I am around their diameter, maybe its the standard to uphold.

However I do feel a connection towards a homeless person, she would always be sitting near the mall, a paper-bag over her head, holes for eyes, and huge baggy clothing, probably to disguise from unnecessary attention.

I would frequently passed by her and waved a greeting, she would do the same, but no words were ever exchanged, due to my shyness.

But I knew she was rather glad, whenever we crossed path, as her bag would move in a weird motion.
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Our relationship changes after a normal day at school ended, I purposely went over to her area, for the first time, finally having enough guts to actually have a conversation.

Skipping along and praising my nervous heart, I finally caught sight of her blurred figure in the distant, a group of people were there as well.

Finding it odd, I rushed over, sensing trouble. She was savagely harassed by a gang of youngsters, shouting and kicking her, blaming her for dirtying the land.

I screamed at them, and took hold off a metal piping resting on the ground, chasing away those hooligans, they ran away like the little cowards they are.

Those bastards and bitches [Pardon my french]

She sat there, as if nothing had happened, looking at me, with her visible, black marble eyes.

"Thank you" her voice was gentle and smoothing, like a imaginary princess would have sounded.

"No worries" I squatted beside, bubbling rage erupts as I inspected her bruised exterior "Are you fine?"

"I'm fine, you don't have to worry"

Anxiety enters my mind, as I feared for her safety, but a bright idea struck away the negativity "Would you like to carry out a request?" I smiled

"What's it? May I ask?"

"Just answer with a yes or a no" I gently spoke, my pounding heart eager to release the news.

"Okay, I hope"

"I seem to have a spare room in my house, and I would love if you would be sheltered from abuse"

"Ermm... but that would be a burden, I must ungratefully decline"

"But I insist"

"...If you insist, I guess" She sequel excitedly like a young girl,

"Let's go" I helped packed her belongings along with her, and held her hand firmly, but she unintentionally brushed it away and stared with apologetic eyes.

"Sorry" She bowed, her hands placed over her chest "I'm really filthy and smelling, I haven't showered for months, I wouldn't want you to stink"

I chuckled accidentally at her cute worries, and wiped away my tears "Here" I grabbed tightly against her will "Let's go"

A bright sparkle ignited from her eyes, as she followed me back.

-Thanks and comment are appreciated-
Title: Re: Homeless: Chapter one [Couple to be revealed in the next chapter]
Post by: TakaminaBG on October 31, 2013, 01:01:11 PM
This is interesting!!
Hope it's AtsuMina!!!!
Title: Re: Homeless: Chapter one [Couple to be revealed in the next chapter]
Post by: dark48 on October 31, 2013, 01:10:46 PM
That was really awesome

Hoping for AtsuMina

Tnx for the story ^^
Title: Re: Homeless: Chapter one [Couple to be revealed in the next chapter]
Post by: blakwhite on October 31, 2013, 02:05:00 PM
its sad  :cry:

and i hope its atsumina too  :fainted: :fainted:

Edit : btw, just follow what your heart said  :smoke:
Title: Re: Homeless: Chapter one [Couple to be revealed in the next chapter]
Post by: Yuki88 on October 31, 2013, 05:27:08 PM
I have a feeling it's KojiYuu but dunno. Interesting start. :D
Title: Re: Homeless: Chapter one [Couple to be revealed in the next chapter]
Post by: kuro808 on October 31, 2013, 08:42:37 PM
Are you talking about Glendale, Arizona?

Just clarifying....
Title: Re: Homeless: Chapter one [Couple to be revealed in the next chapter]
Post by: AshuraX on November 01, 2013, 11:26:35 AM
I'll go with the public and say that it's hopefully nothing too mainstream.
Title: Re: Homeless: Chapter one [Couple to be revealed in the next chapter]
Post by: Kirozoro on November 01, 2013, 10:07:30 PM
An interesting beginning

I wonder which couple are they

Wmatsui, or Mayuki or Atsumina  :?

I'm so eager to know who are they

Please up date  :bow:
Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: Tam_atsu on November 02, 2013, 06:31:27 AM
hoping its kojiyuu..
Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: lezperv on November 02, 2013, 07:25:40 AM
I'm hoping its AtsuMina  :heart: *finger crossed*
Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: Konoe on November 02, 2013, 07:30:35 AM
That poll of yours...

I hope I choose Mayuki. :prayers:
Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: kurogumi on November 02, 2013, 07:35:59 AM
one piece is atsumina right?
doraemon???
pokemon is mayuki (not quite sure)
strawberry panic is wmatsui (not sure too)
avatar is saeyuki?? LOL i'm not sure all but as for atsumina i'm pretty sure is one piece
Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: lezperv on November 02, 2013, 07:54:25 AM
I would really be mad if I picked Strawberry Panic as my favorite anime, but my favorite couple, AtsuMina, won't be it X3
Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: gek geki on November 02, 2013, 08:00:21 AM
i though mayuki is doraemon since doraemon is a cyborg and nobita is kind of yuki
and pokemon is kojiyuu???
and yeah one piece is atsumina YEAH
Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: Konoe on November 02, 2013, 08:07:25 AM
i though mayuki is doraemon since doraemon is a cyborg and nobita is kind of yuki

Somehow that makes sense. :stunned:

I voted for pokemon without any reason! :on shady:

Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: gek geki on November 02, 2013, 08:12:50 AM
i though mayuki is doraemon since doraemon is a cyborg and nobita is kind of yuki

Somehow that makes sense. :stunned:

I voted for pokemon without any reason! :on shady:

DONT WORRY YOU HAD FRIEND,ME TOO CHOOSE POKEMON WITHOUT REASON BUT REALIZED DORAEMON AFTER VOTE IT,BUT IT'S LATE ALREADY KEKEKEKEKEKEKEKEKEKEKEKEKE  :rofl: :rofl: :rofl: :rofl: :rofl: :rofl: :rofl: :rofl: :rofl: :rofl: :rofl:
Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: lezperv on November 02, 2013, 08:15:01 AM
DAMN IT then, I knew I should have picked one piece, GAH! why did I pick my favorite anime for? *shakes head*
Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: Terragen on November 02, 2013, 08:26:36 AM
one piece is takamina favorite anime and manga if i'm not wrong,so choose one piece as atsumina is quite right

doraemon~ gek geki san analized make sense so maybe is mayuki

and strawberry panic is wmatsui,maybe the vibe of yuri from their katafai make sense too

pokemon?? kojiyuu since pikachu always so clingy toward his master so maybe it them

avatar? it's confusing me a lot ang ...ang ang i don't know

Title: Re: Homeless [Couple polling, Read before voting][Who don't love Strawberry panic<3]
Post by: Terragen on November 02, 2013, 08:37:23 AM
ah cotto!! i knew it now!!

avatar is michan! ang! yeah
Title: Re: Homeless [Gomu Gomu no Pairing Poll][Gonna catch'em all][Polling in progress]
Post by: blakwhite on November 02, 2013, 03:14:41 PM
im still intrest you know :3, im just waiting for update LOL XD
Title: Re: Homeless [Last 12 hours of polling, Any changed of vote, please Pm me][Pikachu]
Post by: blakwhite on November 03, 2013, 05:36:13 PM
Last 12 hours for polling, this isn't looking good.

If the pairing of your liking isn't chosen, they will still be in the story, just not the main-focus,

Pairing chosen would have their own chapter of POV, whereas connecting the story, please continue voting.

At the final, 3 hours, the poll's word would be changed to the pairing, by then, I would just modify the title, so keep a lookout.

Too much pressure for chapter 2 x.x

I might be making a happy and sad ending, would it be fine?

happy and sad ending?  :shocked

im fine with it :D

ganbatte ne ~ zorxie - chan  :on GJ:
Title: Re: Homeless [Polling ends, Draw, Atsumina and Tomotomo, 2 versions)
Post by: lezperv on November 04, 2013, 06:40:40 AM
hey Zorxie-chan

you wanna explain to us, or me, how the anime connects with each couple?  :?

I think you should make both of them happy ending instead of a happy and sad… Its just not fair if AtsuMina gets the sad one, we're already sad, no need to add to the pain :P
Title: Re: Homeless [Polling ends, Draw, Atsumina and Tomotomo, 2 versions)
Post by: blakwhite on November 04, 2013, 07:31:01 AM
HELL YEAH !!!
i knew it atsumina is pokemon  :hiakhiakhiak:

well, i hope you dont make atsumina suffer  :shifty:
Title: Re: Homeless [Polling ends, Draw, Atsumina and Tomotomo, 2 versions)
Post by: stv_wong on November 04, 2013, 08:25:19 AM
Just so you know, tomotomo shippers have already suffered due to lack of tomotomo fics, so don't make tomotomo suffer... :shifty: :shifty:
Title: Homeless Chapter 2 (Atsumina) and Replies
Post by: ZorxCemoon on November 04, 2013, 06:25:15 PM
Lovely replies:
@TakaminaBG I'm happy you found it interesting:)   :heart:
@dark48 #BigSmile   :heart:
@blakwhite Hahahaha, Nevermind about that, my heart's too weak to choose the couple:P   :heart:
@Yuki88 Hehehehe, Maybe it's good if it's Kojiyuu, kinda decreasing in amount.   :heart:
@kuro_808 Hahahaha, I knew somebody is going to ask that question, but probably not, it just sound similar:3   :heart:
@AshuraX If it's your own personal preference it's never mainstream:0   :heart:
@Kirozoro I'm also really interested in the outcome hahhahaa.   :heart:
@Seigus Special thanks for the reply to my Polling message, got doubts about it hehehee.  :heart:
@Tam_atsu Depends on your vote, but Kojiyuu is definitely inside  :heart:
@lezperv Pervie-chan:D, Let's hope so, but I have another pairing in mind:P  :heart:
@Konoe I hope so too, Shhh secret  :heart:
@kurogumi Hahahaha 100% passed from the bottom:P, Joking dont hate me  :heart:
@gek geki Hehehehe, Another ace student, I'm proud of you *Cries*, I'm just playing  :heart:
@Terragen Hehehehe, Not going to put a bad remark, later y'all hate me :heart:
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@blakwhite Hope I didn't disappoint you Sensei *Bows*  :heart:/ Hope can you threaten me with a knife, Please spare me!.
@lezperv Pervie-chan it's in the bottom, just by ranking, that's all
@stv_wong I can't tell you my initial plan:), Another knifer, gotta escape!


Thanks for taking interest in my story, hope I haven't disappointed y'all.
I'm starting with Atsumina, Apologies to Tomotomo fans.
For some who don't know why I had placed anime names as the polling, I'm placing it from my most favorite to moderate, the pairings aren't connected to the placement.
One piece's my favorite, Pokemon second, I was obsessed with Strawberry Panic for an entire year, but gave up since people kept pairing Shizuma with Nagisa instead of the cute and cuddly Tamao.
I love avatar, that's why I have Tyzula as a profile picture, and lastly my childhood anime, Doraemon, Actually still watching it, since my little sister likes it too.
Enjoy the short chapter, most of you would be thinking, all the commotion for this crap? Screw this author, burn him in hell.





Homeless:Chapter 2 (Atsumina)

Grasping gently around her wrist, I was unexpectedly awestruck by her foundation, although it was undeniably covered in dirt, it was milky smooth, matching her soothing voice and obsidian eyes.

My heart began pounding in a weird rhythm from the contact, but brushed away the thoughts, concentrating on lookout and guidance.

As we were progressing with the journey, a gut feeling tingles my sense, signal a problem with every footsteps of silence.

It urges me to face her, in which I obliged; I tilted around pausing on my tracks, staring at the cause of my worries.

Damn! I should have noticed that earlier, I cussed at myself, angered by my stupidity and unobserving [Not a real word] mistake, that could jeopardise her safety.

“What’s wrong” She politely asked, probably unsure of my thoughts.

I looked towards her, her mouth was visibly shown from below, so kissable, I quickly shook away the thoughts and smiled, averting her worries away.

'Stop thinking of lewd thoughts' I began unlacing my shoes, peeling them off from my foot, lifted them up with two fingers and generously offered them.

“But-ut!, Please don’t worry about me, I’m used to this” She bravely smiled, never concerned about her bruised and injured foot, fairly cut from walking.

“Not to worry, I still have my socks on” I persuaded, however she again gently rejected my offer.

Since it isn’t my attitude to allow a deserving person, to further injure herself, I hastily kneeled down, forcefully lifting her calf, stuffing her feet carefully into each.

Why does this feel familiar, like I had seen or heard this before.


“There-there-there! Nice and cozy” her bag began to moisten as she shyily faced downwards avoiding eye-contact, I softly patted her head and continued home

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Finally we reached ‘Home’, Passing through the gates together, hand in hand, I unlocked the doors.

“This’s your new home, make yourself at home” I divert my eyes over, but since then, her gaze has never touched mine.

“What’s wrong? You don’t liked it here?” Finally she faced up, her coverage completely drenched in tears, the sparkle in her eyes increased in radiant. “I’m just too happy, Thank you” She motioned for a hug, but flinched, backing off mildly, but I clasped her firmy, pulling her into warm embrace.

“From now on, you’re family”
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated (Atsumina) and Replies-Thanks for polling & reading
Post by: Zita on November 04, 2013, 07:17:36 PM
In that poll I wanted vote for Strawberry panic or for Avatar. Hard choise ;)
Well anyway thanks for update. :bow:
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated (Atsumina) and Replies-Thanks for polling & reading
Post by: dark48 on November 04, 2013, 08:25:31 PM
Tnx for the update

Acchan is so caring ~~~~
but a little perverted hehe
Takamina is so shy

Pls. continue
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated (Atsumina) and Replies-Thanks for polling & reading
Post by: cisda83 on November 05, 2013, 02:06:38 AM
Ah... I didn't changed my vote...because One Piece is my fav.

But I'm happy for the winning vote...because Atsumina is my fav. pairing...

Thank you for the update

Very nice... what kind of interaction Atsumina is going to be having now that they live together?

Can't wait to find out

Thank you again...

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated (Atsumina) and Replies-Thanks for polling & reading
Post by: Kirozoro on November 05, 2013, 02:15:46 AM
It Atsumina :3 YAY

But i hope to see Mayuki couple

I got so confuse at the poll quest, i try to guest which one was Mayuki but i guest wrong  :cry:

At least there Atsumina  :w00t:

Please update  :bow:
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated (Atsumina) and Replies-Thanks for polling & reading
Post by: Konoe on November 05, 2013, 04:25:04 AM
I also didn't change my vote because I believed in pokemon. Mayuki was one piece all along. :banghead:

Patiently waiting for the next update.
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated (Atsumina) and Updated Replies, 4/11 <3
Post by: saeyukilover on November 05, 2013, 01:07:06 PM
I want acchan to be homeless and minami as the savior guy or something. ........ :cow:  :deco:
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated (Atsumina) and Updated Replies, 4/11 <3
Post by: olive29 on November 05, 2013, 01:30:13 PM
I want acchan to be homeless and minami as the savior guy or something. ........ :cow:  :deco:

Me too...
I want acchan to be the homeless and takamina the savior
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated -Acchan or Takamina as Saviour and Homeless
Post by: blakwhite on November 05, 2013, 02:34:46 PM
i will spare your life now zorxie - chan  :hee:

but i confuse, who is the homeless and who is the saviour  :dunno:

and i hope you update soon  :shifty:
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated -Acchan or Takamina as Saviour and Homeless
Post by: dark48 on November 05, 2013, 03:46:39 PM
Heheh I did not notice that XD
I guess that is just what my mind registered while I was reading
the chapter.

Well in most fics acchan is the dominant one so it would be nice
if Minami were the saviour here

Acchan's Knight in Shining Armor heheh
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated -Acchan or Takamina as Saviour and Homeless
Post by: blakwhite on November 05, 2013, 04:43:08 PM
Heheh I did not notice that XD
I guess that is just what my mind registered while I was reading
the chapter.

Well in most fics acchan is the dominant one so it would be nice
if Minami were the saviour here

Acchan's Knight in Shining Armor heheh

i agreed, takamina will be acchan's knight in shining armor   :on asmo:
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated -Acchan or Takamina as Saviour and Homeless
Post by: lezperv on November 05, 2013, 11:33:22 PM
I'm actually voting for Savior Atsuko and homeless Minami XD

Idk why, I just like it when Minami doesn't know anything and being all cute, while Atsuko is struggling to jump the girl XP haha
Thats a bad example. I like cat-like, child-like, animal-like Minami who doesn't really know much while I like Atsuko to be all protective, helping Minami being human  :shy2: but I guess in this case, help Minami having a home? idk…

anyway, update soon Zorxie-chan
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated -Acchan or Takamina as Saviour and Homeless
Post by: Mina on November 06, 2013, 12:07:36 AM
I wanted acchan to save takamina. Also taste when takamina acts as innocent.
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated -Acchan or Takamina as Saviour and Homeless
Post by: kuro808 on November 06, 2013, 12:53:42 AM
I'm not voting but to read that first part I wished to know it rather than do this :nervous
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated -Acchan or Takamina as Saviour and Homeless
Post by: Haruko on November 06, 2013, 05:40:14 AM
yeah!! atsumina!!
Title: Re: Homeless Chapter 2 Updated -Acchan or Takamina as Saviour and Homeless
Post by: ZorxCemoon on November 06, 2013, 06:09:27 AM
@Zita No problem, as long as you are satisfied:)
@dark48 I haven't really chose who's actually the homeless, but is Takamina or Acchan the more dominant?
@cisda83 Yes, let's be Monkey D people, hahahaha, next update would be awhile.:)
@Kirozoro I hope there is Mayuki too :P, probably yes, haven't really thought about it, But I love Mamarin and Mayu-ka-san.
@Konoe Yeah haven't thought about it, damn it, should have known earlier that Acchan and Takamina loves one piece, since Takamina cosplayed as Ruffy, and Acchan watched One piece Z 3 times.
@saeyukilover Probably it would be, I would have to revised the entire story in mind, to fit them into.
@olive29 Actually I'm not really sure, since my initial couple in mind was Mayuki.
@blakwhite Somebody please call the cops, blak has stopped harassing me with a blade, hahahahaa, lots of people sure like a midget knight:P
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@dark48 Acchan would actually be the dominant, since she is rather aggressive in the perverted ways.
@lezperv Pervie-chan, I would reconsider everything before publishing, but it would be a while, I want to take a time to revise my story
@Mina It's a little draw, but I would have to think about it:)
@kuro_808 Kuro, when I decide I would post it alright:), before chapter 3
@Haruko hehehehe, Atsumina gogo Power-rangers.... a blast from the past hahaha.



I won't be updating soon, as I am currently challenging myself to type all different stories ranging from comedy to romance to angst and steamy:P, currently typing a steamy story, Mayuki of course:P

I don't know whether you all have this problem, but I have literally 53 unfinished story stuck in my mobile phone, whenever I copied it over to post, I would spot mistakes and withheld the story for postpone.

Who would you guys like to be the homeless? If you don't decided I could do it, Muahahahahaa. Because in all honesty I haven't went through it......

Next updated would be a while, not going to be all fluffy, maybe their will be problems ahead.

Love you guys for reading.
Title: Re: Homeless|Atsumina| Chapter 2 in progression | Continuation Announcement!
Post by: chichay12 on January 14, 2014, 11:42:31 AM
I never know this fic exist..oh god and its atsumina  :banghead:
Im happy that u will continue this :cow:
Atsumina ftw XD
Update soon :on gay:
Title: Re: Homeless|Atsumina| Chapter 2 in progression | Continuation Announcement!
Post by: lezperv on January 14, 2014, 04:14:21 PM
Zorxie-chan XD

You're back! Kinda? lol, I'm glad you went with my suggestion of Atsuko being the Savior and Minami the homeless, it was my suggestion right? X3

I can't wait to see your chapter 2, honestly I haven't really been active in the forum lately -_- so I don't even know if there are new AtsuMina fics flying around *sigh* Anyway... Ganbatte ne?  :heart:
Title: Re: Homeless|Atsumina| Chapter 2 in progression | Continuation Announcement!
Post by: cisda83 on January 14, 2014, 10:37:37 PM
ZorxCemoon-san

Thank you for continuing your story

Can't wait to see the next chapter whenever it will be out

Good luck in your national service

Take care...

And Thank you again

 :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
Title: Re: Homeless|Atsumina| Chapter 2 in progression | Continuation Announcement!
Post by: Archer1992 on January 19, 2014, 06:26:19 AM
interesting ...

but you have to continue ASAP

because you know have all my atention,,,,

byes