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The Hello! Project Fanfics => H!P Fanfics => Topic started by: mikitty on June 03, 2005, 01:31:18 AM

Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: mikitty on June 03, 2005, 01:31:18 AM: yeh i know its been posted >_< when will the guy do a new chapter? i think im addicted to it. the thing is though, its not even that explict, it's just good and interesting writing.

http://www.livejournal.com/users/sayumi/
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: Thimas X on June 03, 2005, 04:12:18 AM: :lol: Thats bs.
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: elgie on June 03, 2005, 11:03:34 AM: it's not that a good writing...

even I could do it better. :roll:
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: shirenuファクトリー on June 03, 2005, 11:50:46 AM: It's not that good writing, but she's the only one to start writing a long, never-ending fic like that, including pretty much all Momusu members... She deserves respect. It's fun reading it, too. :lol: Bonus points for sort of pimping Maki and Nacchi together. Oh gosh. I need NacchiMaki slash. :(
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: mikitty on June 03, 2005, 12:10:08 PM: i find it fun :oops:
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: elgie on June 03, 2005, 03:06:59 PM: fun... but, kinda unconsistent. Too many commas. Lots of storylines but they don't lead anywhere. Again too many commas (really, that bugs me a lot, esp. combined with the poor writting skills). A too childish feeling. It looks more like an experiment "hey let's place this and this couple and see what happens", so that people wow "yeah Maki-Nacchi how original!".

But anyway, I'm a harsh critic. :roll:

speaking of wandering storylines, I guess I should keep on with my own business (http://www.miumu.com/phpbb/viewtopic.php?t=950&mforum=jpmx) :P
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: shirenuファクトリー on June 03, 2005, 03:16:09 PM: :| Ooooooooooooookay.
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: TheQuickening on June 03, 2005, 04:44:10 PM: I've been following this fanfic too. The writer is a university student, I think. So he/she may just be taking a break for a vacation. Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon...I also wanna find out what happens in the Nacchi/Maki part. :cry: :cry: :cry:
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: OTN1 on December 29, 2005, 06:52:35 PM: I read a bit of it. it was interesting
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: Jabronisaur on December 30, 2005, 04:24:34 AM: I though it was kinda cool. I could use the inspiration to get back into my fics. I still gotta finish that Maki/Ayaka thing and my Konno manga. Oh well.
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: Tuffty on December 30, 2005, 02:11:47 PM: Quote from: Jabronisaur
I still gotta finish that Maki/Ayaka thing and my Konno manga.

Yes. Yes you certainly do. :wink:
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: bluekinoko on June 05, 2006, 09:11:37 AM: The Sayumi thing was good. The writing wasnt great I will admit but atleast she put a lot of effort into it and wrote some pretty cool things.

btw, the writer is a girl

(me? Im a Miki/Aya fan..lol thats probably the only thing that I thought the fic could have needed. A bit more of them but I was happy with that last chapter I read baout the kinky dream)
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: cchen on June 06, 2006, 05:29:59 AM: The words are kinda hard to read xD
There isn't any space between, where's paragraph T_T
Anyways, keep up the good job ~
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: sugar on July 08, 2006, 01:23:39 PM: Wow thanks guys! I didnt realize i'd already been pimped on here!
And yeah, thanks for the criticizm, seriously. My writing isn't very good but I am just starting up, hopefully it will become better and I can impress you all!
(P.S: I'm a year 12 high school student)
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: Elle_Driver on July 08, 2006, 09:39:48 PM: I enjoyed reading that fic. "In my dreams volume 1" was good as well. :D
I hope Aya will have another kinky dream soon. Or it could be Miki's turn next time. :drool:
Sorry for being so ecchi. :P
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: sugar on July 09, 2006, 01:03:14 AM: No need to be sorry, why do you think I wrote the fic in the first place?
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: Elle_Driver on July 09, 2006, 02:18:18 AM: True! :D
So...will there be another dream soon?

By the way I like how Miki teases Rika in your fic.
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: sugar on July 09, 2006, 09:07:59 AM: Aw thanks, and yes, I am currently in process of writing a new dream session, a new diary entry and a new chapter, AND an introduction chapter for my friends who are reading it and have no idea who any of the girls are ^^.
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: Elle_Driver on July 09, 2006, 01:41:20 PM: Yay, good news! Can't wait to read your new stuff. :drool:
Title: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal
Post by: Mikan on July 16, 2006, 07:47:55 AM: In my dreams is so hot! I cant wait for the next part.
It took me 2 days to read start to finish and re-read some chapters that I had forgotten. In total I think I spent maybe ...12 hours on that site. Yes, I know thats only one day but I needed to sleep and work!