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Offline BookSniffer

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[Mari/?] A gaze that was never returned
« on: October 05, 2013, 04:48:32 AM »
A gaze that was never returned


'Long fluffy hair, fair skin tone, smooth skin, beautiful face, a perfect figure, a perfect being at first glance' she thought looking at the person that always attracts her attention, a person who always steals her stare.

'Does she even know how beautiful she is?' she thought as she rest her head on the table, still looking at the girl outside of the coffee shop reading a book.

Mesmerized looking at her, she took out sigh and wondered 'What is she reading anyway? Always sitting at the bench reading that same book.'

Soon the coffee shop's existence dissolved in her eyes and all she could see is her,  she enjoyed looking at her, looking at her eyes trying to focus on what she's reading which makes her giggle, the ways she pouts and bites her lips, the way her ears often stands out, the way she's the only one she sees. She liked it so much and hated it as much.

Because she knows that her gaze will never be returned and even if it does, she's certain that her existence to her will never last as much as hers did.

The silence was interrupted, interrupted by a familiar noise, her phone.

She answered the call and didn't let out a word but a grin.

“Hello? Mariko? Are you even there?” the girl from the phone asked.

“Please Mariko speak up!” the girl cried “I'm on a pinch, I seriously need your help” she continued.

“Hai, hai” she finally replied and let out a little giggle.

“Sheeesh Mariko” the girl whined.

“So what's the problem Minami?” she asked.

“Acchan is coming over and she's gonna sleep here, I'm not sure what to do, I've never had anyone here in my house except you, so what do I do?” she asked panicking.

“Oh, well first you have to clean” she replied.

“I am cleaning right now” she replied  putting the phone near the vacuum so Mariko could hear it.

“Not that, I mean your shaved beard on the sink” She said then laughed.

“Mariko!” she whined.

“Oh and prepare your pink clothes and hide your boxers, just make sure everything is pink and girly so she won''t notice a thing” she continued and laughed again.

“Oh c'mon Mariko” Minami whined once more.

''I'm kidding, I'm kidding” she said trying to hold back her laughter.

Her focus soon was back on the girl who was once sitting on the bench.


'She left' she thought

'Always disappearing when I'm not looking at you eh?'

It wasn't the first time that the girl disappeared while her focus wasn't set on her.

'I wonder which way she goes' she always thought of that but never bothered to find out.

Due to the silence, “Mariko? Mariko? Are you still there?” the girl on the other line spoke trying to pull Mariko back to their conversation.

''Oh, sorry where were we?” she asked lost in thought.

Minami let out a big “HUH?” “What are you even do-, agh, scratch that. It's about Acchan coming to my house for a sleep over, I was asking you what to do” she continued.

She was about to reply but something took her attention once more.

“Well?” Minami asked.

“Mariko?” Minami worriedly said.

Making sure that her eyes wasn't playing tricks on her she stared at it for awhile.

Confirming that it wasn't an illusion she then said “Well, aside from cleaning and preparing food” then started drinking her cup empty.

“All you have to do is” she said then fixed her clothes and bag.

“Is?”  Minami said waiting filled with curiousity as she anticipates what the other will say.

''Just be yourself” Mariko said as she heads out of the coffee shop.

“Oh! Wait, WHAT? What do you me-? Eh? and what was with those long pauses?” she asked with a  disappointed tone.

“For the suspense'' she said then grinned a little.

“wha-?” before Minami could finish saying anything, Mariko cut her off.

She walked and headed to the bench beside the tree where the girl was sitting earlier.

There she found something, something that that girl always held everytime she sits here and everytime she gazes  at her from a far.

A peaceful park where you could only hear laughs and giggles of people enjoying themselves, where the crowd isn't much but not too few either, there exists a bench where this untitled little red book rests.

“Her book” she softly said.


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I seriously hope i triggered someone's interest  :)
Sorry if it's too short, at first i was thinking of making it a long OS but then my bed started to feel more fluffy and comfortable and it started to attract me more than it needs to so it might be a 2 part OS or this might just be a teaser. Who knows?

If you somehow find the story lifeless, well you're not alone cause i do so too. This is my first time so please be gentle  :wub:
thinking about it maybe it's because it's too short? and there's no interaction of the characters at all just a phone call and gazing.   :yawn:
« Last Edit: October 05, 2013, 08:53:51 AM by BookSniffer »

Offline imteedee

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Re: [Mari/?] A gaze that was never returned
« Reply #1 on: October 05, 2013, 05:02:57 AM »
I dunno, I kinda like these kind of OSs  :)
If you have read some of my OSs they're somewhat close to this kind of delivery(LOL)
anyway, I like it! good start, really  :) way better than mine(LOL)

PS: If you may, please continue cause I want to know who's the mystery girl cause I'm guessing it's Miichan :P
« Last Edit: October 05, 2013, 05:10:10 AM by imteedee »
my hat is off. saluting.

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Re: [Mari/?] A gaze that was never returned
« Reply #2 on: October 05, 2013, 06:05:08 AM »
The way you describe the girl on the first sentence makes me think it's Haruna, but that might be just me.... hmm...

BUT this is interesting! And the ending cliffhanger D:
QUICK, UPDATE THIS. *brings hammer out* *is whacked*
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Re: [Mari/?] A gaze that was never returned
« Reply #3 on: October 05, 2013, 06:59:37 AM »
Long hair and a perfect figure? Haruna

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Re: [Mari/?] A gaze that was never returned
« Reply #4 on: October 05, 2013, 07:57:23 AM »
Heeeeyyy.....when i saw the title [Mari/?] Owh please its Haruna :on hypto:

i really wish its Haruna...because the hints really tells its her

"the ways she pouts and bites her lips, the way her ears often stands out" who else but Haruna!! XD

you're doing great! keep it up...hope when they meet its gonna be interesting....XD

can't wait for your next update...if its MariHaru, pm me okay? http://forum.jphip.com/index.php?topic=35149.msg1225783#msg1225783  :glasses:
« Last Edit: October 05, 2013, 08:07:26 AM by yanouchi »

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