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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #180 on: January 09, 2008, 01:29:08 PM »
I think my mind's running away with itself in this story. :lol: I'm stuffing so much into what really isn't very long... and it's pretty deep to me... but anyway, hope you enjoy. :) :heart:


Chapter 29

Opening her eyes to what was still pre-dawn darkness, Saki rose slowly out of a pleasant yet occasionally troubled sleep to the warmth of her blankets, as well as of a girl who held her loosely as they pressed against each other. As the events of the last day or two swam once again into her conscious memory, she laid her hand on her bare stomach, which felt warmer than most of the rest of her. She felt a strange ripple through her body at the touch, and began to tense at the idea of what she’d done. While she slept, and even now, she might have felt the most at ease and relaxed she had in at least a long time. However, despite that, she also felt impure in a way she’d never experienced before.

Why was that? Didn’t she love this girl who now held her in the waning night? Didn’t people who were in love do things like this? She thought she knew the answers to those questions…

Slowly and carefully she grasped the wrist of one of the arms holding her just above her stomach. She lifted it just as delicately and angled it behind her to rest on the other girl’s side. Saki froze when, at Miyabi’s change in position, she rolled onto her back, her other arm now lying limp beneath Saki’s side. As carefully as she’d moved so far, Saki rose and slid out of the covers and off the bed to the floor.

When she attained a good balance, she looked toward the washroom. She wanted to bathe to try and remedy her unclean feeling, but thought that wouldn’t be a good idea right now since she didn’t want the other girl to wake. Instead, she plodded over to her suitcase and pulled out some simple clothes to outfit herself with, just enough for her to be acceptable to walk around in public.

After that, she quickly but silently ducked out the door, padded down the quiet hall, and rode the elevator to the bar. She took a seat at the bar, which had a modest crowd for so early in the morning, and ordered a caffé mocha while she closed her eyes to ponder.

After the disaster with Jun, which she was beginning to believe was of her own making, she forswore that level of intimacy until far into the future when she was sure she’d be ready for it. Little did she know that time would come so quickly, and that she would even be the one pursuing it. That strange chill rippled through her body once again, and she was thankful when the steaming mocha was set in front of her.

What of Miyabi? If she herself didn’t even think she was ready for it, with the various relationships and experiences she’d had such as with Jun, how could she believe Miyabi, whose only knowledge of intimacy was the innocent bond she shared with Risako, was prepared for the responsibilities and consequences such an act resulted in? The rational side of her supposed this was different than what might have happened with Jun, but her emotions told her a different story.

Still, she was already worried enough about Miyabi’s instability as she explored this strange power she apparently could use, and despite how eagerly the girl reacted when Saki came onto her, she worried more whether this was just more fuel to the girl’s fire.

But… she’d explained all this to Momo – all her worries and her fears. Momo, who was the one she shared a close bond with, and trusted possibly more than any other. She’d not only done what her heart told her; she also followed her trusted friend’s advice, the advice from someone who was only concerned with her happiness.

“…It was horrible, Momo,” Saki told her friend. The memory of that night in the graveyard had tortured her ever since. She looked off into space in front of her as she relived it. She saw the storm that seemed meant just for them. She saw the horrible snake that had come out of Miyabi’s mouth. She heard once again Miyabi’s voice as she talked to some entity that no one else could hear.

“First there was the rain and the storm,” she finally managed to continue to Momoko. “That was bad enough, especially since I had a feeling it wasn’t exactly… natural. Then…” She hesitated, trying to shut off the visions. “Well, I was nearly scared to death. I’m worried about her, Momo…”

“Oh…” Momoko responded. Then the girl scooted closer and wrapped an arm around her shoulders. Saki looked over into her face, which looked it was trying very hard to show comfort. Despite herself, Saki almost laughed. Momoko’s attempts at comfort usually just ended up being comical more than anything. Well, she supposed there was a sense of comfort in just laughter.

“You like her, don’t you?” Momoko asked her.

Saki stared back with a puzzled expression. “…Of course I do. Why else would I be doing all of this with her?”

“Well maybe...” Momoko said with hesitation.

“What?” Saki asked, curious.

“Nah…” Momoko replied, withdrawing her arm and hugging her legs to herself, staring ahead as if she saw something Saki couldn’t.

“Momo,” Saki said in a low, warning voice. “You’d better tell me what you were going to say or I’ll have to…” She thought a second. “I’ll have to… tickle you!” She raised her hands threateningly.

Momoko gave her a skeptical look, but apparently decided to go on, albeit reluctantly. “Well, I was just thinking…” she said. “Apparently you’re the one she feels closest to and trusts the most right now. Risako was her best friend, but that’s obviously not the case anymore.”

Saki studied her as she spoke. There was an odd anger in her eyes for some reason at the idea of how Miyabi and Risako’s relationship had fallen. She wondered soberly if the girl was upset over how that mirrored what the two of them were going through. She hoped it didn’t. She knew she still thought of Momoko as her closest friend. But maybe it was different for her…

She put her arm around Momoko this time, and the girl gave her a surprised look before becoming self-conscious again and going on. “Maybe…” she said. “You should try to open up to her. Give her something that’ll make her feel really special. You might be the only one who can pull her back.”

Saki thought on this a second, frowning. “Like what?” she asked finally.

Momoko looked at her as if she couldn’t be more dense. “Don’t make me say it…” she said, now in a warning voice of her own.

Saki’s eyes widened. “You don’t mean…!”


But she did mean. Saki couldn’t have believed her friend, who herself admitted she might have been in love with her, would want her to go that far with another. But they talked a bit more. They reasoned it out. Saki in her trust for the girl came to believe her. She believed that she loved Miyabi – that’s how the word slipped out early the next morning. Then over the day, when she pushed to see how far the girl would go, Miyabi didn’t give her any reason to believe that she wanted her any less than she did the younger girl. And then, with the craziness and almost euphoric feeling of the night, she just let herself become lost in the moment…

She frowned. Risako hadn’t helped in that either. Seeing that an even younger girl could enjoy herself, and even be responsible with it, made her all the more intoxicated with the emotion that had been consuming her throughout the day. She could tell by Miyabi’s reaction to the girl that more happened than she let on, even if Risako had managed to fool her too. But still, hearing her talk…

“Rii-chan!” she exclaimed, entering the room to the girl lying on her bed with her hands crossed beneath her head staring wistfully at the ceiling. It was getting late, but Risako didn’t look like she was anywhere near going to bed. So much for tucking her in… “You’ve had quite a day! If you perform like that at every concert people will actually start coming to hear you sing!”

The jibe caught Risako’s attention, and she turned her head to stick her tongue out at her. Saki jogged over to her and jumped onto the bed next to her. Then Risako suddenly smiled and sat up. “You’re right. It has been quite a day!” Then she looked up at the door, checking to make sure it was closed and locked. “Captain… can I talk to you about something? I’ve been itching to tell someone all day, but I’ve been scared too… If I tell you though, you have to promise not to get angry with me!”

Saki grimaced at her. “Of course you can talk to me,” she responded quietly. “But I don’t know about the getting angry part. Is it something that’s going to upset me?”

“No no…” Risako said dismissively, then peered back up at her timidly. “I hope not…”

“Go for it then!” Saki said reassuringly, patting the younger girl lightly on the shoulder.

“I kissed a boy!” Risako blurted out.

Saki blinked. “You did?” she asked. She wasn’t expecting that, but quickly tried to adapt with a little humor. “Well… I hope he was your boyfriend.”

“Of course!” Risako responded, nodding earnestly. “It was…” She smiled and looked back up dreamily at the ceiling again, folding her hands below her chin. “It was wonderful… He had come to the concert last night, and after we all left the arena we walked together to a movie. He was a perfect gentleman during that, but afterward it was getting late. I told him I should be getting back to the hotel, but he grabbed my hand and told me he didn’t want me to go. It was so romantic…! So then we rented out a karaoke room…”

Saki narrowed her eyes. She didn’t like where this was going. “Risako…” she said warningly, the pitch of her voice rising with each syllable of the girl’s name.

“We just did karaoke!” she responded. “But then, during a break, we just got to talking, and it all just went so nice. And then… and then he kissed me!”


Despite the dangerous territory, Saki had been brought along by the girl’s wonder and excitement. It was all new to her. She remembered what that was like; how good it felt to be close to one you felt like that toward. That got her thinking about Miyabi… and what Momoko had said.

She probably paid less attention than she should have to what else the girl said, although she’d satisfied herself enough that Risako hadn’t gone too far. She and her boyfriend apparently made out for a while as both of them got used to the new experience, and then had fallen asleep next to each other. They were awoken rudely early the next morning by the building manager demanding payment for the extra time they’d spent, as well as eyeing them both warily at what mischief the young couple might have been up to over the night. That left Risako flustered up until she made her way back to the hotel, but the feeling quickly turned to exhilaration that she carried on throughout the whole day.

That also made Saki want to feel that same exhilaration. As the day was spiraling onto seeming inevitability, she advised Risako to try and get some sleep, and upon a suspicious looking Momoko and Chinami returning to the room, quickly excused herself to return to Miyabi. Now, as it was nearing sunrise, it left her drinking coffee by herself in the hotel bar.

“You’re up early,” a thin, high voice said from beside her.

She looked over sleepily at a girl who’d seated herself in the stool to her side. “Momo?” she said in surprise. “What… what are you doing up so early?”

Momoko raised an eyebrow as she ordered a chai latte of her own. “I could ask the same of you. I thought you’d want to spend your last morning here with Miya-chan.”

Saki suddenly blushed, unable to help it at the girl’s words. Now both of Momoko’s eyebrows raised. “No!” she gasped. “You didn’t!” Saki’s blush only deepened, and she tried to bury her face into her coffee, her throat constricting any thought of speech. She really wasn’t good at being outspoken, especially when it involved herself.

“You did!” Momoko said, eyes wide as saucers. Well, small saucers. Momoko’s eyes were just too tiny for anything other. Saki noticed something register behind those eyes, but she couldn’t decipher what it was. “So…” she said in a softer voice, grinning now. She also elbowed Saki lightly.

Saki finally felt her throat loosen enough to open her mouth. “So what?” she croaked.

“You know…” Momoko said, still grinning and looking at her shiftily. “How was it?” she said in barely above a whisper, looking around evasively as if to make sure no one overheard.

Saki stared at her. She couldn’t believe the girl was asking her that! Here she was, sitting over her cup of coffee and re-evaluating everything that had happened over the last twenty-four plus hours, and the girl came in and asked her this?

“It was wonderful, Momo,” she said, without really thinking about it. “What kind of question is that anyway? I love her, so I’m not going to have anything to complain about…”

Momoko’s smile vanished, and she took a sip of the latte that was just brought to her before responding flatly, “Then why were you down here before sunrise sipping coffee by yourself?”

“I’m sorry Momo,” Saki said quickly, touching her shoulder. She suddenly felt quite awkward. “I… I guess I’m just scared, that’s all.”

“What are you scared of?” Momoko asked. “What she can do? What she’s done? Remember, if it weren’t for her I wouldn’t be here now…”

Saki hadn’t heard Momoko mention her near-death – or was it death? – experience in quite that way before, and it caught her off-guard. She was right. How much harm had Miyabi really done? Sure she turned Risako into a mouse, but as far as Saki was concerned in her capacity as Captain, the brash young girl had deserved something. And didn’t she recover from that quite well? Maybe it even gave her the boost which motivated her to have a great day such as she did today.

“Momo…” she said slowly. She wanted to be careful, but she also couldn’t stifle her curiosity. “Do you really not remember anything that happened after the train derailed?”

Momoko stared off into space over the bar. Saki noticed she had her hair combed so that her bangs covered only half her forehead. The other side was brushed back, and it nearly even looked slicked. She had to admit it made her friend look very cool; edgy even, like a rocker chick or something. It was very unlike her usual cute, prissy style.

“I remember there was a passage like a very long hallway,” Momoko said, as if she could still see it now. Saki began to worry at what she saw in the girl’s eyes. “It was very dark. I couldn’t see an end to it. A dim purple glow from all around was the only way I could even tell the shape of the place I was in.” She took another sip of her coffee, and Saki reached over as if to lay a hand on her shoulder, but couldn’t manage to do it.

“Then I started running,” she continued. “I ran and ran. It seemed like I would run forever, but I never got tired. And then I saw…”

Suddenly she blinked, and looked around in that birdlike way of hers as if just realizing once again where she was. “Captain?” she asked, looking at Saki as if she’d never seen her before.

Saki gave her a soft and tender look of concern. “I’m here, Momo-chan,” she cooed in an attempt at comfort. “I’m sorry I made you relive that…”

Momoko stared at her another moment, even reaching a hand out to her as if making sure she was real, but then quickly bent back down to her latte, taking big gulps that must have burned her throat.

Saki watched her friend quietly as she drank. She didn’t think the girl had told anyone what she’d just told her. Momoko almost had seemed to lose herself back in the moment she was reliving, and especially with her reaction once she came back to reality Saki wondered if she had even been close to losing her. She had obviously become quite detached.

She couldn’t imagine having that kind of experience. Had the girl been dead? Was that what death was like, just running through darkness forever? Then Momoko had seen something. Saki would give almost anything to know what it was she saw, since it may have even been linked to what Miyabi did, but she was never going to put her through that experience again. Knowing now how it affected her, she couldn’t do that and still allow the girl to call her a friend, much less a close one.

Finally Momoko looked up from her latte self-consciously. Saki cracked a grin and almost giggled at the brown marks on her top and bottom lips. It seemed like she was going to say something, but was momentarily halted by Saki holding a napkin up to her mouth to dab softly at it in order to clean it off. Then, once her lips were clean, when Saki caught herself staring at them she fell back and dropped her napkin onto the counter, staving off a blush the best she could.

What was she doing staring at the girl’s lips? She didn’t really find Momoko attractive. It was nothing against her; she just… wasn’t Saki’s type. For one, she liked somebody taller. She shook her head. Beyond that, she’d just slept with Miyabi, her girlfriend! She felt something clutch hard at her insides.

“Well…” Momoko said faintly, apparently trying to reorient herself as well. That only made Saki’s inner turmoil worsen. She knew her friend loved her, and now she had just gone and teased her like that. There was nothing more to it; she was a horrible person. And she was even supposed to be their Captain? Well, that type of relationship was already long lost with Miyabi at least, especially after tonight…

She heard Momoko clear her throat, and she returned to her normal squeaky voice. “Don’t worry about me, Captain,” she said. The title almost made Saki cringe. “I’ve… thought about that a time or two in the past week, and each time it gets a little easier. I’m sure that in another week it’ll hardly bother me at all!” As she ended, her voice sounded as cheerful and high as always. Despite herself, that made Saki even look up at her and smile. Strangely though, the piercing gaze she received in return from her friend made her feel slightly uncomfortable.

“Um…” she said, returning to her own mocha, which was beginning to get cool, and she drank the last of it. She glanced outside to see the sky brightening slightly. “I think I need to get back upstairs. Miya will be up soon and I… should be there.”

Then she got up and smiled apologetically at Momoko. “I’m sorry to make you go through that again.” She bowed slightly.

Momoko giggled, catching Saki by surprise. “Saki-chan, didn’t I tell you not to worry about that? You go up to your sweetheart.” Then she gave Saki an evil grin that made her blush again.

“Yeah…” Saki responded. Avoiding the girl’s eyes to make sure she didn’t blush any deeper, she headed back through the bar and up the elevator.

Upon reaching her floor she slipped into her room, noticing it was still dark except for a tinge of light seeping around the closed curtains. Making sure the door was locked again, since she still most definitely did not want to be disturbed, she stepped lightly over to the edge of the bed.

Looking down at the dark form lying in it, she thought about what she would do. She still had that dirty feeling, but it seemed less than before. Momoko was right; she loved this girl, so why did she feel bad about what they’d done? Why had she slipped out of bed so early in the morning to sit alone at a coffee bar?

She could go and have that bath. The noise would probably wake Miyabi up, but the girl should really be getting started anyway. They’d be jumping on the train to head their separate ways home before long. The thought made her stomach drop; she didn’t want to part from her, and this wasn’t going to be a short time either. Well, she’d just have to do her best to come up to Saitama every weekend if she could. That is, if Miyabi’s mom would even let her. Maybe she’d even be able to catch her after school some day…

Deciding against the bath for perhaps a few more minutes of precious intimacy, she slipped out of most of her clothes and snuck under the blankets again. Sidling up next to her girlfriend, she tentatively reached an arm across her body to pull her close again. However, she froze as she felt the girl grasp her wrist. Despite the small shock of fear, the girl actually pulled her arm farther down around her waist, snuggling back against her. The sudden feel of Miyabi’s warmth almost intoxicated her.

“You came back to me,” Saki heard her say in a low voice. She didn’t know how to respond, and when Miyabi noticed it she turned her head back to face her. Saki stared ahead into big, brilliant eyes. “I was afraid when I woke up and you were gone, and I didn’t want to leave the blankets… But then you came back to me.”

“Of course I did, Miya,” Saki said, trying not to choke up. She felt she was bad at expressing her emotions, but sometimes she just couldn’t stop showing them. She thought sometimes that she was almost too much of a crybaby, but here, next to this girl, she had a very hard time controlling them.

“So…” Miyabi said softly, rolling the rest of her body around to face her. “Good morning.”

The girl’s simple greeting made Saki unable to stop herself from smiling beneath her tears. Miyabi raised her hand, wiping her tears gently from her eyes. “Good morning,” she responded in a breathy voice.

Miyabi glanced over toward the window, where the early dawn light still just peeked around the curtains, and turned back to her with a grin. “We still have a little while before we need to get ready to leave…” she intimated. Saki thought she was going to blush, but strangely, upon looking into her lover’s eyes she felt excitement rise up within her. What she interpreted as an impure feeling before now just reflected tingles of anticipation. If impurity could feel this amazing, how could it be such a bad thing?

When Miyabi leaned slowly in to kiss her, she let herself go completely. Despite anything else… despite the complexities of life, despite the specter of death, despite it all… her want for this girl that she knew was her own overrode everything, spurred on by the other girl’s own seemingly desperate want… and need. The sun may have been becoming brighter with the onset of day, but this morning she felt the two of them outshone anything.

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #181 on: January 09, 2008, 02:56:06 PM »
The one thing that really caught my attention is Saki and Miya's relationship. I can really feel their emotions especially Saki's.  Her doubt and dirty feeling as she gave up her virginity and maybe almost regretting it. I love all the details you put in. It also makes me think about how can you get over it? Would you feel numb and not feeling anything and later on start feeling the regret chip on you heart little by little as time goes on or would you be so happy you'd cry? Yet. she still came back to her. Did she do that because she don't have a choice after what they had done last night or is that part of Saki still trying to deal with what happened and the other part who love Miya still wanted to be with the girl? It's confusing. All these feelings overlap each other and muddle it. I suppose that's what humans are. A string of emotions muddled together until you can sort through them and makes sense of it through the process of understanding what you want and how you feel toward what you want.

Anyhow, I thought that you did a great job detailing this chapter. Very entertaining and thoughtful.  :yep:

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #182 on: January 09, 2008, 03:02:34 PM »
Nice! I like how it was all Saki's point of view this chapter its was interesting to read she felt impure and unclean after doing the deed then towards the end coming to somewhat of a conclusion if it feels good it cant be so bad. Really liked the last couple of paragraph to nice way to end it all with all the emotions between Saki and Miya but I also like Momoko telling Saki to go to Miya and being really supportive of Miya and Saki's relationship I'm torn. Really good story I love all the drama and the love triangles going with Momo liking Captain who just broke up with Jun moves on to Miya who had a innocent think with Risako who now has a boyfriend keep up the great work.

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #183 on: January 09, 2008, 04:12:31 PM »
Saki really gets me confused. She likes miya, but now she's somehow attracted to momoko. At least, in the end of the chapter, she doesn't feel as dirty anymore about what she did with miya. I still don't get a good feeling about the whole situation (Saki gets me confused because she is confused), but now they're going to have some times for themselves to think about it. And what really gets me sad is that miya is kinda oblivious to what's happening with saki. I really like miya in this story (and in real life, lol), so I get sad when people are confusing around her and/or hurt her.
The other Berryz are also a little confusing. Not only risako (that sometimes likes miya and sometimes her boyfriend) and momoko (that I can't help but like, even though she is weird towards miya) but the other girls too. Maasa seems too happy about saki/miya, and I don't know why but this leads me to believe she likes another berryz, lol. I guess chinami is a little afraid of miya, which is understandable, but it's sad because they seem to be really good friends (at least in real life). And about yurina... well, I don't know.  XD
Man, your stories really get me thinking, I love them! Keep it up!  :)

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #184 on: January 09, 2008, 04:54:16 PM »
g4rfield: Did you mean to give part of that reply to Loser's fic? Or did you just confuse the stories? XD I just thought I'd mention that in case Loser felt bad about not getting the comment. :P

I'm glad this is making people think. :) That was my intent... Heck, it's even gotten me to think... I'll say one thing though: don't be too sure about Momo's good intentions. ;) I'm starting to acquire a better image of her, and am curious to see what everyone thinks when we get to see what's really going on. For example, her conversation with Saki when they "kissed", and then the flashback in this chapter...

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #185 on: January 09, 2008, 05:05:00 PM »

I'm glad this is making people think. :) That was my intent... Heck, it's even gotten me to think... I'll say one thing though: don't be too sure about Momo's good intentions. ;) I'm starting to acquire a better image of her, and am curious to see what everyone thinks when we get to see what's really going on. For example, her conversation with Saki when they "kissed", and then the flashback in this chapter...

ooooooooooh I hope we get a sneaky, evil, cheating, girlfriend stealing Momo...it would be so devious and cute at the same time.

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #186 on: January 09, 2008, 05:06:21 PM »
LOLL  :lol: :lol: :lol: My brain is definitely not working this early in the morning. Yes it was intended for Loser's fic.  XD

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #187 on: January 10, 2008, 03:19:22 AM »
I was all ready to label Momo as the mean one in this fic. Someone going all out to destroy the relationship between Miya-Captain to get Saki for herself. Then you had to make me feel all sorry for her here. I can't believe how self-sacrificing she is, to encourage Captain to um, do stuff with Miya XD Darn, now I want Momo to be happy with someone too. Make that happen! :P

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« Reply #188 on: January 10, 2008, 03:35:22 AM »
I like how the chapter was from Saki's perspective this time.  I've been wanting to know more about what she was thinking after the kiss with Momo and all.

It confuses me why Momo gave Saki that suggestion, cuz y'know, you would think Momo would want that herself. I really have no idea what momo is/was trying to do with that suggestion she gave, she's definitely has an ulterior motive...I think so  .....I'm still expecting Momo to blackmail Miya, or maybe even kill,..not saying that I want it to happen though  I'm still anxious for another Risako/Miya talk....wanna read how Miya is gonna react/feel if  or if Risako tells her what she's been up too :P

and I have to agree with walking_wounded about all these ppl in the love mix(well, one not involved but is still mentioned). It kinda reminds me of six degrees of separation, haha

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #189 on: January 10, 2008, 10:48:31 AM »
This story just keeps getting better and better (and it was already great to begin with).

I agree with lil_hamz on the Momo thing. I was thinking that Momo had come back all evil, then she sacrifices her feelings to try and get Miya and Saki even closer. But this could all just be part of a big evil master plan -dun dun dun-

LOL at Risako. Young love is so sweet.

Sorry I haven't posted in ages. But you can see why as my posts are always poor. I do read this and 'The Circle of Three' as soon as you update them though. Keep it up and as I haven't said it in ages...

UPDATE!!! :D (especially circle of three)

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 29: The Philosopher]
« Reply #190 on: January 15, 2008, 07:01:19 AM »
I had a fever when I intially read this chapter, and when I saw there was a new chapter up, my mood immediately brightened. But then I got really confused :? when I saw it was Miya x Saki, 'cause I hadn't read the story title, only the author of the story... So I had started reading this chapter thinking it was a new chapter of "The Circle of Three". XD

Anyway, this was really nicely written. I like how we really got to see what's going on in Saki's head for once, since we are mainly privy to Miya's point of view. You really feel how torn and confused Saki is regarding everything that is going on, but at the same time she really does love Miya and is just trying to figure out how to deal with it all.

But man, did it ever pull at my heartstrings when Saki returned to their bed after her talk with Momoko.

“You came back to me,” Saki heard her say in a low voice. She didn’t know how to respond, and when Miyabi noticed it she turned her head back to face her. Saki stared ahead into big, brilliant eyes. “I was afraid when I woke up and you were gone, and I didn’t want to leave the blankets… But then you came back to me.”
:gyaaah:  Poor Miya. That's definitely not a good feeling to wake up to the morning after your first time with the one you love and who supposedly loves you too (keeping in mind that Miya still has a picture of Saki and Momoko kissing in the back - or maybe the front - of her mind).

Can't wait for the next chapter!
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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 30: Take Me Now]
« Reply #191 on: January 17, 2008, 07:05:51 PM »
Wow, thanks everyone for the comments...! :D I'm glad to see so many of you still reading, as well as even some at least relatively new readers (thanks w_w and maize!)... and some who've been MIA for awhile (Lolli, your posts are not poor at all! I love seeing 'em! :D).

It sounds like the main things in your comments were Saki coming back to her after going to the bar for a bit, and what exactly is going on with Momo. I love the emotional roller coaster Momo is putting you through, and it's incredibly ironic considering what's actually going on with her character right now (which I haven't explained yet), so even better. XD This chapter's taking a little different track - beginning a little different arc that's been building for awhile - but don't worry, the angst isn't going anywhere either! :P It'll just kind of be the backdrop tension that'll keep bending and bending... until eventually it might break. There's quite a lot to even read into the last paragraph or two of this, and so I'll be eagerly anticipating the beginning of the next chapter (as I hope you will too). Well, for the time being, enjoy this~! It's one of the longer chapters of this story, but quite a bit happens...


Chapter 30

“Miyabi!” her mother called from downstairs. “There’s… someone… here to see you!”

Miyabi sighed, staring off into space past her algebra book as she levitated and spun it around slowly in front of her. Couldn’t people just leave her in peace?

Then suddenly she felt a rush of excitement. What if it was Saki?! It would be odd for her to come over on a school night, but as they’ve gotten closer and closer lately she guessed she didn’t really know what to expect. This was all completely new territory for her, after all.

At the burst of thrill that accompanied the thought of her girlfriend she completely lost her focus on her algebra book, and it began spinning faster and faster until it apparently gave up on her and shot across the room, crashing through her window and rocketing off somewhere into the distance until she could no longer see it.

Miyabi stared after it, completely frozen at the release of power and the ensuing commotion, until she heard her mother calling frantically from downstairs – “Miyabi!!!” – and the sound of feet shuffling up the steps as best she could in her long narrow housedress.

“It’s okay, kaa-san!” Miyabi yelled at the door, able to regain her senses. “I just… I…” Her mind raced. She of course couldn’t tell her mom what had really just happened, but she also needed to explain why she suddenly needed a new algebra book. “I got so upset over my homework that I picked up the book and threw it across the room. But I didn’t aim well, so it ended up going through the window.” She paused as if she was looking out it. “I can’t see where it went though. I’m sorry, I think I need a new algebra book…”

Blessedly the stampede up the stairs calmed, and she just heard soft footfalls make their way to her door. She looked over at it as her mom pushed it open slowly to peer at her guiltily grinning daughter. She took a glance at the window, and then looked back to Miyabi. “I thought you liked math…” she said quietly. Miyabi shrugged, still grinning, hoping her mother wouldn’t ask any more questions.

She didn’t, but instead opened the door wider and gestured her toward it. “Come on down then,” she said. “Like I said, someone’s here, and it didn’t look like someone who would be happy to be kept waiting.”

Feeling a new surge of excitement – Someone who doesn’t want to be kept waiting? It had to be Saki-chan now! – Miyabi jumped up from her chair and headed toward her mother.

“While you’re busy, I’ll find some cardboard for the window. I’ll call someone up to fix it in the morning.”

“Don’t worry about it,” Miyabi responded, waving a hand nonchalantly as she passed her mother in the doorway. “I’ll take care of it later tonight.”

“Oh…” her mother said, only slightly surprised. “All right, dear. Well hurry on downstairs.”

While it might have been strange in most families for a young daughter who’d just broken a window to say she’d take care of it like that, Mrs. Natsuyaki was quite used to strange pronouncements such as this from her daughter. Miyabi was quite exceptional after all, and she only did her best to understand her.

Her mother quickly out of her mind in the anticipation of maybe seeing her girlfriend, Miyabi made her way quickly down the stairs and into the living room, where she stopped, noticing an older woman dressed in a black ladies’ business suit of jacket and skirt rising from the couch upon her arrival. This woman was definitely not Saki.

She was several years younger than Miyabi’s mother, but she also thought the woman might look young for her age. Her round face beamed a wide smile at Miyabi as she considered her. For some reason Miyabi thought she was giving her a careful appraisal, despite the bright smile.

“Hello,” Miyabi said, bowing a little, offering just slight politeness toward the stranger who had invaded her house.

“Ah, Natsuyaki Miyabi-san, correct?” the lady said. “I’m pleased to meet you!” The lady offered her own short bow. Miyabi regarded her skeptically, but she seemed sincere in her expression.

“If you will excuse me, I will make us some tea,” Miyabi suddenly heard her mother say as she shuffled past on her way toward the kitchen. She had her head bowed to the woman, but gave Miyabi a curious look as she disappeared into the other room.

The stranger smiled over at her as if waiting for something, and even though she hadn’t introduced herself properly yet, Miyabi gestured her to have a seat. She gratefully reclined stiffly back into the sofa. Miyabi walked around it to take a seat in a chair just opposite and regarded the woman again.

“Is there… something I can do for you?” Miyabi asked. She wondered idly if the woman was from her school, and quickly began thinking of events from the past few weeks since returning from Nagoya to try and guess if she’d done something that warranted a home visit.

“Actually,” the stranger said. “I was hoping there might be something you could do for us.”

“Us?” Miyabi asked, looking around the room in case someone else was hiding out in it.

The woman across from her tittered in soft laughter. “No no, I’m the only one here. Speaking of, where are my manners? I haven’t introduced myself yet!” She bowed her head slightly again. “I am Natsumi Abe. I’m from a… special branch of the government.” Miyabi suddenly became very wary, not only because the woman worked for the government but also since she swore she knew that name from somewhere... “We seek out… exceptional individuals, and see if there is anything we can do to help each other out.”

She stopped her explanation when Miyabi’s mother returned with tea and offered a cup daintily to the mysterious agent. She took it, and when her mother took a seat on the other end of the sofa, peered over it toward Miyabi as she drank.

“You say you’re from the government?” Miyabi’s mother asked. Miyabi looked over at her, and she could see excitement in her features, although it was mixed with a hint of trepidation. “What interest could the government possibly have in my daughter?”

“Oh, we have interests in a great many things, Mrs. Natsuyaki,” Abe responded. “You surely know your daughter is quite special and unique.”

“Oh, I couldn’t say something like that,” her mother responded, hiding her face behind her own cup. Despite her words, Miyabi detected definite hints of pride within her voice.

“Actually,” Abe said, setting her amazingly completely drained cup of tea on a coaster atop the end table. “Would you mind if I took your daughter for a little walk? I’d like to have a little chat with her, and I find that a bit of fresh air does wonders to liven up a conversation, don’t you?”

“Why of course,” her mother said, rising quickly herself. She glanced over at Miyabi, still with pride in her face yet slight anxiety as well. “Miyabi, you don’t mind having a talk with Abe-san, do you?”

“I suppose not…” Miyabi said noncommittally, and still taking no great pains at formality, rose from her own chair, smoothing the skirt of her seifuku before sauntering over to join the agent.

“You won’t be long?” her mother asked. “I’ll have dinner ready at six. Won’t you join us, Abe-san?”

“Thank you very much,” the woman smiled, “But I’m afraid I can’t stay that long.” She bowed again to her mother. “For tonight, I’d just like to talk with your daughter and then I must be off.”

“All right then,” her mother responded, and gave both of them smiles as they headed out the door.

They walked in silence until they were out of sight of Miyabi’s house, Miyabi glancing over from time to time at the woman, who just looked around herself as if fascinated at every facet of the neighborhood. Miyabi had just started kicking rocks softly to keep herself from being bored when the stranger spoke up.

“How is your friend doing?” she asked, still not looking over at Miyabi in lieu of examining the neighborhood.

“What?” Miyabi responded, unsure if she heard the question right. Despite the rocks, she could feel the boredom creep into her like a thief in the night.

“Tsugunaga… Momoko-san, isn’t it? The one you brought back to life?”

Miyabi stopped dead, and the woman turned to face her, her polite speech belying budding excitement Miyabi saw behind her eyes. “How do you know about that?” Miyabi asked quietly, no longer feeling that spark of boredom.

“We’ve been watching you for a while, Natsuyaki-san,” Abe responded, giving Miyabi an intense gaze.

Miyabi, feeling a bit spooked, glanced around as if she’d see faces peering out at her from bushes or around the corners of the mostly gated houses. Abe tittered behind her hand again. “Oh no, you won’t find anyone in those bushes,” she said, as if the idea was the most ridiculous thing in the world.

“You know what’s involved in the things you do,” she continued, becoming serious again. “The energies you manipulate create ripples that affect many other things all over the natural world. Those ripples can be identified if you know where to look.”

Miyabi considered the woman again. “So you’re saying you know where to look?”

The agent nodded, though didn’t speak again at first. “But while we’ve seen some of the… effects… of what you do, we can’t be sure exactly what the results have been. Aside from what seemed to happen to your friend, that is. I’m curious… Could you show me something that you can do? It can be anything. Whatever you feel comfortable with.” There was easily discernible excitement in her features at the request.

Miyabi regarded her warily. “Why should I?” she retorted. “I’ve seen this kind of thing on TV. If I show you and you think I’m a freak, you might cart me off and lock me away somewhere…”

She expected the woman to laugh again at her suspicion, but instead the woman looked as serious as she’d been so far. “I can assure you,” she responded, “Nobody will lock you away anywhere. We just need to make sure what we hear about you is accurate. If so, then I hope we can help each other rather than establish a negative relationship. Wouldn’t you like to put what you can do to a use that benefits society at large?”

Miyabi just continued her scrutiny of the woman. Society at large… That sounded an awful lot like saying that if she didn’t cooperate with them, it would be harmful to society, and could still end in her being locked up.

Abe seemed to notice her continued hesitation though and let out a slow breath. “I know you have no reason to, but all I’m asking is for you to trust me. Let’s see.” She perused their surroundings herself. “What might I be able to do to gain your trust…”

Finally she focused on a bare patch of dirt. Bending over, she picked up a stick and tossed it to the spot. She then raised a finger, and Miyabi could discern intense concentration on her face. After a few seconds she heard a soft crackling, and looked over to see that a small flame had sprung to life on the stick, burning along its length. She stared into it as if it was mesmerizing.

“Did you do that?” Miyabi asked quietly.

The woman nodded. “I’ve studied these forces and elements of nature for years, and finally I’ve been able to make a small flame like the one you see there. There are those who can do more of course, but I hope by this small demonstration of how I too am at least somewhat a ‘freak’, you’ll be reassured that if I’m free and walking around, you won’t be locked up either.”

Miyabi stared into the woman’s eyes before going back to the fire, which had nearly consumed the stick now. “Okay…” she said, still a bit reluctantly.

She closed her eyes, yet the last image imprint of the burning stick remained within her mind. She projected her thought outward to it, feeling the warmth of the nature that felt like it wrapped around her.

As her eyes opened slowly, the burning stick rose from the ground along with a thin bed of the dirt beneath it. She reached out her hand as if to grab the stick, and then suddenly she held it, still burning within her fist. She didn’t feel the heat; instead, she had directed the flame to cascade toward the stick’s tip until it appeared lit just like a large match. Then she squeezed her fist, and the stick disintegrated into ash, leaving just the flame which still danced above her hand. She opened her palm beneath it and looked over at Abe, who stared fascinated at the small flame dancing above her hand.

“Very creative…” she murmured. She didn’t appear impressed, or even anything of the sort, but Miyabi had a suspicion she might have been just doing a remarkable job of holding it back. “I wonder if you can do something… more productive though. Something the opposite of the destruction you just managed.”

Miyabi frowned at the insinuation that what she’d just done was something negative, and the flame winked out in front of her. Abe though was looking back toward the patch of dirt and the brush surrounding it.

“Do you see those blades of grass creeping out from beneath the bush? Do you think you could make those grow?” Despite her direction, Miyabi thought the woman spoke as if not expecting Miyabi to accomplish the task.

Frowning again at the doubt of this woman who knew nothing about her, Miyabi stared hard at the grass. It took a few seconds, but eventually the blades began to extend noticeably, picking up speed until stopping their sudden growth spurt when they were about half as tall as the bush they now surrounded.

“Remarkable!” the agent breathed, now apparently no longer able to conceal her amazement as she stared at the grasses. “Even Kuromi wasn’t able to do that until…”

“It’s not that remarkable,” Miyabi insisted bitterly. “I thought you people had been watching me? I’ve conjured and made deals with demons… Playing with fire or making a little grass grow isn’t much more than child’s play.” Suddenly she seemed to register what else the woman had said, and her mind blanked. “Wait… Kuromi?”

“You’d be surprised at how many people claim to conjure demons,” the woman murmured wryly from the side of her mouth, kneeling down to run a blade of the grass between two of her fingers. “We haven’t found one yet that could reproduce the supposed act though.”

“But I did!” Miyabi insisted defensively, putting aside names of old friends for the moment to respond to the affront toward her word. “I could do it again whenever all the prerequisites have been met! I… How do you think I managed the resurrection? Life can’t be reawakened without a deal with Death.”

“We’ll see about that,” Abe said, seemingly nonplussed, and she rose, still staring at the grass as if it was remarkable in itself. “Everyone involved in cleaning up the wreck claims she was just knocked out and hidden until she woke up, after all. I hope you understand, we only have your word to go by, and nothing like this has ever happened before.”

Miyabi felt herself fuming, but did her best to keep a rein on it. What did she care what this woman thought about what she could do anyway? She’d never liked the government very much. Why would she want to assist it in its own plans?

“As to your other question, Kuromi Takeda is the one that first led us to you. We knew her from her mother, and she began working with us not long ago. She gave your name when we asked her if there was anyone she had talked to about her little family tradition. She gave others too of course, so we thought little of it. That was, at least, until we noticed your online claims and observations from our Readers.”

Feeling her anger slowly fade, Miyabi fell into thought at the information overload. Kuromi… She hadn’t heard the girl’s name since she transferred. It made her sad actually that she seemed uninterested in keeping up with her, since Miyabi had thought of her as a close friend, but apparently she hadn’t been forgotten. A light smile began creeping to her lips.

“Anyway,” Abe said, resuming her businesslike air. “I think I have what I need for today. You’ll hear again from us soon.”

Miyabi blinked as the woman bowed and began walking briskly away from her. “Wait… what?” she stuttered.

The agent raised a hand to waggle her fingers in a wave back to her. “See you again, Natsuyaki Miyabi-san,” she said. “It was a pleasure meeting you, and you can’t imagine how much I look forward to our next encounter.”



“I’m home!” Miyabi called in a grouchy voice as she entered her house after a long and confusing walk back. She left her shoes at the entrance and stepped up to the floor, shuffling down the hall past the living room.

“Welcome back,” her mother said, standing from a spot on the couch where she had apparently been nervously sipping tea and awaiting her return. “Did it… go well?” she asked, peering to either side of Miyabi as if the agent might still be with her.

“I guess,” Miyabi responded. “I’m gonna go call Saki-chan.” She pulled out her cell to check the time. “Dinner’s in a half hour, right?” Her mother nodded slowly, clearly holding herself back from saying more. “Well, see you then!” With that, Miyabi skipped up the stairs and into her room, closing the door softly behind her.

Once in, she sighed as if to exhale from her mind the memory of the insanity that just occurred. What did that Abe woman want? She definitely didn’t impress Miyabi very much. She’d started the conversation by talking about Momoko, but by the rest of their encounter it didn’t seem as if she believed a word of it. Amazed that Miyabi could play with fire? That she could make a little grass grow? That was even less than child’s play compared to what she’d done.

She needed to vent, and she wanted some comfort. Hence, she was going to call Saki. It wasn’t like she wasn’t going to anyway, and even again after dinner, but now she really had a reason!

She belly-flopped onto her bed, and as she waved her upwardly bent legs back and forth above it and through a cool breeze entering her room from the broken window, she picked up her cell phone and dialed her first speed dial. That number used to be her brother, but it had recently changed for obvious reasons.

“Moshi moshi,” came a young feminine voice from the other end as someone picked up.

“Hi,” Miyabi said, falling completely flustered at the sound of the girl’s voice. She remembered something about there being a special reason for this call, but what it actually was she suddenly couldn’t remember for the life of her. “It’s me.”

“Miya!” Saki cooed happily. “I was just thinking about you.”

“You were?” Miyabi responded, smiling dumbly and twirling a strand of her hair in a finger.

“Mhmm,” came the response. “I miss you.”

“I miss you too…” Miyabi said. “It seems like ages since I last saw you.”

She heard giggling from the other end. “You know that was just yesterday after school, right?”

“But that’s a long time!” Miyabi defended herself. “And it’s not like we had any private time since we just walked to the station… It’s been almost two weeks since we had any real time together!”

She blushed at the memory. It had been several weeks since Nagoya and everything that had happened there. Saki visited the first weekend after they were back home, and Miyabi’s mother actually let her visit Saki two weeks later. The problem with going to Saki’s was that apparently other Berryz girls felt quite comfortable in bothering their Captain at nearly any time they pleased, so Yurina and Chinami showed up as well.

To say the least, Chinami for one wasn’t thrilled to find Miyabi visiting too. Yurina mostly seemed to keep her happy and out of their way, although they most definitely didn’t get much private time in Saki’s room. Actually though, through the experience at Saki’s Miyabi thought she began to realize at least part of the reason why Chinami got so upset about the two of them.

Before she started going out with Saki, Chinami was one of Miyabi’s closest friends. She wondered at times how she dealt with the always-bubbly girl, but there was also an endearing quality to her that she couldn’t resist. Plus, she enjoyed scaring her whenever she got the chance.

Since Miyabi and Saki became nigh inseparable, Chinami had been able to see her less and less, and Miyabi thought she might be jealous of the attention she now didn’t receive. The interesting side effect of that was that Chinami now had more time to spend with others, mostly Yurina and Maasa. And sometimes Risako, although of course the youngest girl now had her own boyfriend keeping her busy too.

Since Chinami lived closer to Yurina, Miyabi found that since they left Nagoya the two of them had apparently spent a lot of time together. Apparently they had before too, but Miyabi noticed something different in their relationship now.

Yurina seemed completely oblivious, but whenever Chinami looked at her the older girl suddenly seemed to feel awkward as if just realizing her friend was there, and she’d look that way until her attention was diverted elsewhere again. With Chinami’s attention span, that diversion occurred quite often. However, awkward or not, Chinami didn’t seem willing to be very far from Yurina’s side. Not saying anything about it though and just observing quietly, Miyabi pondered on the implication.

“I guess you’re right,” her Captain responded, bringing her back to the present. “And it was weeks before that since you had, er, visited me…”

That’s not an experience I want to relive anytime soon!” Miyabi laughed, though she didn’t hear it echoed from the other end.

“I’m worried about Chii, Miya…” Saki said. “I don’t think she likes us being together very much…”

“Well she’s just gonna have to live with it!” Miyabi responded firmly. “Because we’re not going anywhere.”

“I know…” Saki said. “But I have to think of these kinds of things as Captain. I’m supposed to be able to hold us together, not be the cause of something that pushes us apart… I don’t know… Maybe I should resign as Captain… Erika-chan stepped back after all, and that worked out quite well for them.”

She finished with a bitter edge to her voice. She wasn’t thrilled with the attention the other young Hello! Project group had been getting lately, and even took it as almost a personal offense that by all indications it already seemed like they might be more popular. Considering how good-natured she normally was, her reaction was all the more shocking.

Miyabi however just sighed at the girl’s words. This was a conversation they’d had many times since those nights in Nagoya. “Saki-chan…” Miyabi said in a lightly scolding voice. “These things happen no matter what position you hold, and people just have to learn how to deal with it. Besides, after the other week I have a feeling we aren’t really Chii-chan’s problem.”

“What do you mean?” Saki asked in a soft and confused voice from the other end. Miyabi hadn’t revealed her thoughts to her girlfriend yet, though after dealing with this for so long, she felt it was time.

“Did you even notice the two of them when we were all at your place?” she asked in a voice whose pitch constantly rose. “They seem to have been spending an awful lot of time together…”

“No, I didn’t notice them,” came the soft response. As she went on and her voice became even softer, Miyabi imagined the blushing face on the other end that hers quickly jumped into competition against. “You were there.”

Miyabi’s throat constricted as it felt like something was being squeezed inside her, and she held her phone at her ear in silence for at least a full minute.

“Miya…?” Saki finally asked, concern seeping into her voice.

“Yeah,” Miyabi choked out, and swallowed at the parching dryness in her throat. She missed the girl so much…

“Are you okay?”

“I’m fine. It’s just…” She felt like she was going to choke again. “I love you…”

“I love you too,” Saki said on the other end, and Miyabi could sense in her voice that the girl was smiling. “Hey,” she said gently. “Mom’s calling me for dinner, so I have to go. I’ll call you later, okay? I just heard from the company today, and it sounds like they have big news for you…”

Miyabi nodded before she realized that Saki could of course not see it from a prefecture away, and finally said quickly, “Okay. But give me at least an hour or so. I’ll be eating dinner soon too, and you know how my mom is…” She wondered momentarily what the news from the company was, but the thought of it quickly fled aside from that of her girlfriend, which was occupying most of her brain space at the moment. As well as the rest of her body, she thought, blushing.

Saki giggled. “Mhmm… well, until then!”

“Bye bye~” Miyabi said, and she slowly slid her phone closed.

Rolling over on the bed, she closed her eyes in peaceful bliss at the experience of talking to her girlfriend again. Then, as the silence began bringing her back to reality, she remembered what happened just before the call.

She glanced at her phone. She still had about fifteen minutes until her mom would call her for dinner. Quickly trying to pull herself out of pleasant thoughts of Saki to those of things with more pressing concern, she rose and walked over to her altar.

So the Abe woman that visited her earlier from out of nowhere didn’t think much of her power, did she? Well, the relaxation of her phone call had cleared her mind a bit, and she decided it was time to prove what she could do.

She thought a minute. The woman had left perhaps a half hour ago, so she couldn’t have gone far yet. Beginning to smile, she wondered if she might not be able to take out two birds with one stone.

Lighting some candles at her altar, she took another small glass candle-holder that was filled with sand and poured some of it onto its slightly concave metal surface. Then she ran her fingers lightly over the sand, smoothing it out to where it gave a thin covering to the metal. Then she drew a hasty map of Japan into the sand before carefully outlining Saitama and Tokyo within it, thinking that would be her most likely target.

Lifting a thread of twine that she had tied to a small round jewel, she held it over the map and closed her eyes. “Show me Kuromi…” she whispered, focusing on the girl’s name within her head and even picturing her with her long raven-black hair.

After a few seconds, she felt the weight change beneath the fingers that held the twine as the jewel swung slowly over the map. She maneuvered her hand carefully, responding to what she felt as the jewel’s momentum, until it became still again. Releasing herself from the power, she opened her eyes slowly and looked down at the map.

Surprisingly, the jewel hung over somewhere in the northeastern part of Honshu, where she hadn’t given the map great detail. Grumbling a little, she closed her eyes again to seek further.

“Sendai…” she heard herself say after a moment, and her eyes popped open. Wherever they’d taken the girl, it was in that city. That is, if they’d taken her anywhere. Maybe she just lived at home still. However, Miyabi’s intuition told her that she didn’t.

Laying the jewel and twine toward the back of the altar, she turned from it and walked to the center of her room. “Let’s see how long you doubt me now…” she said, grinning to herself, then closed her eyes again.

Attempting to clear her mind as much as possible, she concentrated the hardest she had for nearly anything so far, probably shy of that night in the graveyard. She hadn’t exactly tried to do this before, but knew in theory that she should be capable of it. Surely she was powerful enough by now. After all, she’d summoned a demon from the netherworld, hadn’t she?

Reaching out in order to not only recognize her surroundings, but to know them, she looked beyond them, something made considerably difficult considering the clear focus she had to keep on her immediate environment. Finally she was able to summon the image of a girl into her mind, clearing up the vision until it was as clear as if she was standing right next to her.

“Take me now…” she commanded in a voice that sounded hollow to her own ears, and the breeze that was blowing in through her broken window – which she’d have to remember to fix later – appeared to strengthen until she could hear it even scream past her. The shrill whistling continued for an indeterminable length of time until it slowly calmed down to nothing.

Cautiously, Miyabi opened her eyes to find herself in a bright sunlit room that looked smaller than her own, and in which she stood amid walls that blared a peppy pink, with just a bit of a quite contrasting black. There were also posters plastered all over the room from various manga, including at least three of Hamtaro.

Miyabi though focused on a girl who sat on the floor amidst oddly neat stacks of the colorful books, leaning down over one she was apparently reading. Then Miyabi smiled.

“Hello Momochi~♪ Want to take a trip?”

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 30: Take Me Now]
« Reply #192 on: January 17, 2008, 07:39:15 PM »
Yay for another update!

Miya's inability to focus when she talks to (or generally thinks about) Saki is absolutely adorable. :)

Is there a Chinami/Yurina romance blooming here? :) It'd be nice to see some more Chinami and Yurina in this fic. Even though Maasa's not particularly vital to the plot, we do get lots of enthusiastic Maasa moments. I'm interested in seeing more of how Chinami and Yurina's characters develop.

Now I'm wondering, is this Natsumi Abe THE Natsumi Abe, or just a lady with the same name?
“I am Natsumi Abe. I’m from a… special branch of the government.” Miyabi suddenly became very wary, not only because the woman worked for the government but also since she swore she knew that name from somewhere...
I'd figure that Miya would know who Natsumi is. Anyone who knows anything about Morning Musume knows who Natsumi is... I'm looking forward to seeing how that plot line develops.

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 30: Take Me Now]
« Reply #193 on: January 17, 2008, 08:26:36 PM »
What? How the heck did Miyabi not recognize Natsumi Abe? I mean it has to be the same one because you usually don't throw in the name of a particular person, expecting it to be someone else.  :?
 
A Chii/Yurina thing possibly happening? lol, I kinda sensed something would come up, but Yurina is oblivious about it now, she will find out though

I don't have an idea of why Miyabi suddenly went to visit Momo. I know Natsumi mentioned her, but there wasn't much said. Maybe Miyabi wants to confront Momo on their trip? And I really loved how you described Miyabi's "take off" scene, I can't really give a name for what she did there, but it reminded me of that Harry Potter floo powder (was it?). And I also see the chapter title came from that part :lol:

And congrats on the 30th chapter of this story :) Wow, I can't believe how long it has been since a lot of us had been following this story

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 30: Take Me Now]
« Reply #194 on: January 17, 2008, 09:09:33 PM »
Wow, chapter 30? I like this story so much that I've never noticed it was this long already!  :wub:
The cute parts were the Saki/Miya conversation and Yurina/Chinami being some kind of new pairing... I really want to know what's going to happen with them!
I'm also curious about this Natsumi Abe. Is she the same woman from H!P or someone with the same name? I also thought that Miya not remembering where she heard the name was weird... Oh well... I still want to know a lot of things, I guess... But that's the whole point of reading a story, so keep it up! I'm already waiting for the next chapter, lol  :lol:

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 30: Take Me Now]
« Reply #195 on: January 28, 2008, 07:39:00 PM »
Awww thanks for all the 30th chapter congrats... :D lol. I didn't really think about it in that way, but I'm glad it's lasted this long too. :) I was gonna respond to these comments ages ago but then I got so totally wrapped up in other things... but I definitely wanted to talk about one thing in particular everyone mentioned.

Ok so it's lame but using my "it's a soap opera" excuse I have altered this world just a liiiittle from reality...  :ph43r: I mean, there's already witchcraft and resurrections and everything so why not? :lol: The thing is, this story has gotten more and more Berryz-centric and should stay that way (I like the seven-person dynamic enough without having to worry about extra complexities, so really there's no reason to part from that). There is a plan starting in the next chapter where you might see a bit of C-ute appearance, but that'll be the extent. That said, I've decided other H!P girls might appear (such as Nacchi), but as more functional characters to push forward a plot point, since I think it's more fun using them than just some random unknown Yuna Takeda or something... Miyabi "recognizing" the name is just my little way of making fun of myself and what I'm doing and pointing out how ridiculous it is. :P I wanted to make that clear and apparently got the impression across. :P That's just kind of what I'm doing with this story... it's just gonna kinda meander and parts might connect or not, but just in whatever seems like the best way to induce more drama and fun... all the stuff of a good soap. ;)

Anyway, on to other stuff. Chinami thinks the idea of two girls dating isn't right, so she's going to have a problem when she herself starts to have undeniable feelings that she might have a hard time coming to grips with... She'd just never really thought about it before the MiyaSaki thing came into the open, but now... Also, definitely expect more Miya/Saki/Socko/Momo goodness, beginning with Miyabi popping into the peach girl's room... I wonder if anyone will be surprised at her reaction. :shocked:

Anyway, main thing in this story - it's gonna deal with crazy stuff, but I'm trying not to take myself seriously, so you'll never know what to expect. :P

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 30: Take Me Now]
« Reply #196 on: February 27, 2008, 11:13:45 PM »
-gets on knees and begs-

please please please please please please please update. It's been forever.

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 30: Take Me Now]
« Reply #197 on: February 28, 2008, 02:02:35 AM »
*Joining Lolli*

yaay!.. update!!

I want a Miya/Rii chapter!  :heart:
Hope that it is possible..   :wub:

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 30: Take Me Now]
« Reply #198 on: February 29, 2008, 06:52:26 PM »
Awww, thank you guys for the support! ^___^

I've got a few projects going on here, and things are getting really busy for me in my life too - just got accepted to a study abroad program in Japan for next year so have all of that stuff in addition to everything else going on... I've also been sick this last week and winter's been dragging on, so with all that and then the stress of the busy-ness I just haven't felt like writing too much, even when I might have some time. >_< Glad to see you guys still care though.

It really has been a long time though, hasn't it? I'll see what I can do, but this next week or two will be perhaps the busiest so far as I'm beginning a new class and also leaving for spring break... argh. XD It annoys me that I can't write more, but I'll do my best. In the meantime please enjoy the stories from the other fine writers here. ^_^ We'll carry on...

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 30: Take Me Now]
« Reply #199 on: May 01, 2008, 07:51:54 PM »
Hello everyone! Thank you to those of you keeping up with my other fic. ^__^ But I've been looking around the place lately, and I see there is such a wonderful movement around this fic that I'd be remiss not to try and make this active again... So, I've been thinking over things and deciding how I want to continue it.

A problem over the past few months is that I caused myself somewhat of a block that (along with my busy schedule) worked to prevent me from continuing. Like my comment before chapter 29 said, I felt like my mind was running away with itself in the pace of updates I was doing. I think it was good to take a step back for awhile and maybe look at it with fresher eyes again. I do still want this to be soap opera-ish in the ways I said, but I also want to have broader meaning than maybe some directions I was going. I think my experiences in pushing forward my other fic helped me realize the types of complexities I really love to write.

Anyway, so I went back and reviewed everything that's happened so far... the story itself, your comments/theories/hopes/wishes, and I feel I've regained a new sense of purpose that I might have lost a bit in my own mind during the course if it all (though hopefully that wasn't lost in my writing - I still feel very strongly about everything that's been done so far. I just need a clearer direction to continue). Now that I've gotten back into the writing swing with my other fic, and now that the term is over and I should be less busy for a while, I plan to begin to continue this as well. I hope maybe to have a chapter up by this weekend sometime, though I also know it's best not to hold myself too hard to deadlines. ;)

In any case, thank you all again so much for your support, and I hope you'll continue it once I keep up my end of the bargain! :)

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