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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #100 on: July 10, 2007, 02:04:09 AM »
Poor Yossie, first Nono sees her completely naked in the shower, now Rika sees her only 60% clothed? XD Who's next?
Wasn't it Aibon who saw Yossi naked?

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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #101 on: July 10, 2007, 02:29:23 AM »
Yeah it was XD -smacks cousin silly-

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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #102 on: July 10, 2007, 05:32:41 AM »
Wow, the plot thickens.

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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #103 on: July 10, 2007, 06:12:32 AM »
Walk-ins FTW. Yossie 40% Naked made me giggle~. And with all those sound effects, something sounded really bad xD There was a "crack" in there, I wonder what bone Miki broke? And Yossie seems like one of those people that'd be so indestructable, she'd actually have an expression after getting hit by a car (at least rather than 100% crimson complexion.) The Fujimoto house...O_O It seems amazing. And Kemeko uke~ xD! (...not only that, Yuko's seme!) Hmm...YoShiba...now we have a closed love triangle (if it escalates, that is...) Please write more~! *gives you Yossie*

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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #104 on: July 10, 2007, 02:02:29 PM »
-smacks you silly- You actually had a decent comment, but there's no hint whatsoever of Yoshiba o_o

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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #105 on: July 10, 2007, 02:52:50 PM »
I dream a large amount~ excuse the weed, beer, cigarettes and cheap liquor from my brother's party last night, since I did write that during the party...and didn't get to sleep until 9 45 am

(and none of this was exaggerated)
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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #106 on: July 18, 2007, 12:33:16 AM »
Sorry for never commenting before, but I finally got around to reading this whole thing . . . and it's definitely crack! I remember talking about it before, but I didn't think that it would be this awesome. (I mean, I knew that it would be awesome, since it was a cool story and you're writing it, but I can't recall all of the details. xD)

Where to begin? Well, I totally love the Fujimoto family! (Who doesn't?) And, the Ishiyoshi moments are kyoooot! The whole Shibata Clan thing is awfully strange, but I'm assuming that Shibata is related to the man who stole the hagoromo, as JFC has already assumed as well. Then again, maybe Yossi has something to do with the stealing of the hagoromo? Or, perhaps she is another celestial maiden? After seeing her mischievious thoughts, one who gain the impression that she isn't all that good, but I could be reading into it wrong. (Not to mention, she's being too nice to Rika. If she took her job seriously, she wouldn't be that way, but maybe she is falling for her. We'll never know until she gains back some memory!)

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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #107 on: July 18, 2007, 05:10:59 PM »
Comment time!

First: Rika being a decendant of Maki's makes sense as to the whole "why me" thing, but I belive the story she was told is off somewhat. According to the story Yuko told her she already has the robes, but in chapter 6 Maki told Yossie that she wanted her celestial robes. Also in the same chapter, she told Rika, and I quote:

Quote from: Maki the Celestial Maiden
“Long ago, they stole something precious from me, defiled me, and on top of that, killed me for their greed. What person wouldn’t want revenge?”

My theory is that the story is true to a point: "Stole something precious" could mean the robes; "Defiled me" could mean the forced marrige and "other things" the fisherman put her through;and "Killed me for their greed" is the true turning point. The robe could be jewel encrusted and when she found it she was killed by the Shibatas so they could keep it.

Second: Hitomi's identity. In the crash the real Hitomi coud have died and another celestial maiden could have simply have used the corpse. The memory loss could be usable to the Shibatas and give her an in to the company. Or she could be the spirit of the girl that Maki was sparring with. Those quotes at the end of the fight could be hints. Maybe.

And Finally: The Transformation. Rika seems to start to transform when she feels like she can love Hitomi or probably arroused. This has happend only around Hitomi which leads me to this theory: Maki and the sparring partner probably had the same kind of feelings for each other. The feelings Rika has simply draw her out into her body and being reminded of that friend calms her down and sends her back.

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« Reply #108 on: July 24, 2007, 02:21:56 AM »
Hmm xD


Yeah, most of you are on the right track or understood the triggers for Rika's transformation xD I'll clarify what it is in later chapters xD

Indeed, Yossie the schemer :] I love that image of her <3 We'll see what she's planning later.

Most of you are also trying to figure out Maki's past as well. I will have to say that JFC and Glcorps are good thinkers and are around the right area, although wrong in some aspects. Try to think along the same track as them and you might understand more xD But I have to tell you now, Maki is in her homicidal mode and probably won't reveal anything about her past, and is focused on retrieving her hagoromo and destroying the Shibata family.

I hope to get more comments! D<

Then again, this next chapter doesn't have that much to comment on o_O

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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #109 on: July 24, 2007, 02:22:39 AM »
Wedgies :D

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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #110 on: July 24, 2007, 02:23:48 AM »
Hell, I'll wedge since I'm getting into this fic lately O: ( I like waiting so I can read a lot at once :] )

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Chapter 8: A day with the Fujimoto Family









And so…

“Ancestor…?” Rika leaned backwards, supported by pressing her body against her arms. The woman was unsure whether to feel stunned or to feel angry towards that conclusion. Being stunned would mean she would have to be surprised that such a woman was a relative of her’s. Being angry would mean she would have to feel pissed that such a psychotic and homicidal spirit was her relative.

“Undergoing shock or just angry at the events which accumulated ‘til now?” Miki rested her arms on the table, on of which was raised so Miki could rest her head against it, losing all energy of the day’s events and now simply looking lazy, lethargic, and bored.

“I don’t know what to think really…” the cursed woman returned to a formal sitting position, worrying if she was committing a rudeness to the people giving her their hospitality. “It’s just… Out of the ordinary… Everything just came up and slapped me in the face.”

“Oh believe me, it’s going to keep bitch-slapping you now, with what we’ve done,” Yuko’s face became sullen, causing a few wrinkles to show up here and there to contribute to the folklorist’s age.

“You mean you’ve made it worse somehow?”

“It’s not that… Sorta… Uh…” Yuko became shifty-eyed, curling her finger in her lion mane-like tresses.

“Spit it out! My life is on the line isn’t it?!” Rika’s internal panic began to leak out through her face.

“The Shibata family. They’ve killed women like you before. They would find anyone with any trace of that tennyo’s ancestry and eliminate them to prevent the tennyo from appearing. As for how they do that, I think they take the date of when they kill the maiden’s host and keep an eye on the people born on that death date.”

“But didn’t you say things like ancestry and such? They would have to focus on a certain family, right?” Miyabi piped up.

“Yeah, but that’s if the family wants to preserve itself and marry into eachother, which obviously isn’t the case here. Since Fisherman-chan and Tennyo-chan banged and had children… The children wouldn’t want to marry eachother to carry out the blood line, wouldn’t they? So they just went off marrying different people and then their children would marry other people, and the chain would go on…”

“Anyone could be a tennyo at this time period. Well, not really, but maybe one out of a ten-thousands could be it…” Rika concluded.

“However…” Yuko began, “That’s just the maiden in your blood…In my research, there are countless tales of the tennyo varying from prefecture to prefecture, even around the world, but Japan is our main focus. Now… If we include the current tennyo in your body along with the rest of the others of her kind…”

“…Then my ratio would be one out of hundreds…”

“One out of five.”

Rika’s eyes widened at the woman in front of her.

“That’s just the likeliness of you having that blood though…The likeliness of a tennyo being able to ‘wake up’ and influence your body is one out of a hundred.”

“So many numbers confuse me…” Miki rolled her eyes about, “Damn it, I’m hungry…”

“Thank you for ruining the moment, idiot Neechan…” Yuko threw a burning hot teacup at Miki’s head, to which the hit connected and left a scalding and berserk Miki running about fanning her head at the heat while the main house keeper, Kei, rose from her seat to try and help Miki nullify the pain by using a cool table cloth.

Ignoring the commotion in the background, Rika spoke up, “So the Shibata family… Are they only looking for the maiden that would resurface as a whole instead of just people who merely have the blood in them?”

“Correct, Charmy-chan.”

Rika raised a brow at how she was addressed as by the elder woman. So Miki-san and Miyabi-chan rubbed off of her… I really need to get used to these eccentric people…
“Don’t become too emo, I have the blood in me too,” Yuko said, holding her hand out in the air and then a on the other side of the tatami mat room they resided in, a scroll hanging on the wall unhooked itself, then rolled itself, and then came levitating towards Yuko’s hand, much to the shock of Miyabi and Rika (along with Miki and Kei, who had paused in their commotion to stare in awe).

“My power is telekinesis. I have the slight tennyo influence in me, but it’s definitely not like you, who is genuine descendant.”

“Wait! So that means you cheated! All that throwing knife crap about you is fake because all you did was use your telekinesis to control your aim!”

“So what if it’s fake?! It’s still freaking useful and kept me alive in dreaded situations where I’ve been chased by bears when I was looking at hidden shrines in forests!”

Knife-throwers, gunner ninjas, and a groping demon that fights with chopsticks…This is quite the crazy family…

“Oh, one last thing…” Yuko said to Miki as she searched for something in the sleeve of her kimono, “Hmm… Where is it… Ah ha!” Yuko took out a rather interesting collar and what seemed to be matching wristbands. The design seem to irk Rika however, for it had the patterns of dark blue outlines of lotuses and butterflies sewn on black material. “The collar can stretch out really far, so you shouldn’t have problems putting it around your neck.”

“Weird lookin’, but I’ll wear it for awhile before I’ll rip it to shreds,” Miki said in a fake giddy high voice before putting on the aforementioned objects.

It didn’t look too bad, Rika thought to herself. The collar part did look a bit cute with Miki’s neck, and the wrist bands seem even bigger than the normal for it had extended from her wrist to almost her elbow…

“I call them the ‘bitch bands of doom’ and I made them myself!”

“Is that seriously the name you gave them?” Miki uttered gloomily as she inspected how the wristbands looked on her.

“Nah, the real name is ‘obey the heavenly maiden’ bands,” Yuko smiled as she waved her hand dismissively.

“I like ‘bitch bands’ better…” Miki looked off to the side shifty-eyed.

Rika was amused as Yuko glared at her younger sister, wondering if Yuko had looked any eviler, she might have spontaneously combusted.

“Nevertheless, SUCKER~!” Yuko made a childish face by pulling on her bottom eyelid and sticking her tongue out, “now that you put them on, you can’t take them off unless we tennyo bloods permit you to!”

“Say what?!” Miki tried to go for her collar but as she pulled outstretched it too far trying to pull it off, there was an electric spark administered to her wristbands which caused her to scream out in pain. “Damn it…” Miki was laying on the floor, twitching and convulsing as if she was having a seizure, much to everyone else’s amusement.

“Do you want us to show you around the house or no?” Yuko stood up, still amused at the younger sister of her’s having seizures.

“That’s not going to kill her, is it?” Rika also stood up, eying the woman beneath her having spasms.

“Those bands have some of my powers infused in it, so they know how much to shock her, so no worries,” Yuko motioned for Rika to come with her, to which she obeyed.

“And Neesan has a stubbornness that even the devil’s jealous of, so no worries either. It’s very hard to kill her,” Miyabi laughed, following the two elder women.

Perhaps the wealth of the Fujimoto family can’t be measured. Rika saw that what made up the majority of the mansion were simply the empty rooms made for the dance classes held at this place. It was a dance school after all. The upper floors of the traditional Japanese home were for the residents of the mansion. Climbing the stairs was an event of itself, for as Rika came up, she saw beautiful calligraphy depicting mottos or themes drawn on scrolls which hung up on the walls next to the curving stairs. It seemed that the entire second floor was made similar to that of inns or hotels. There was an elaborately designed hallway which had made diagonal paths around various rooms, big rooms judging by the sheer length of the walls by which the wooden paneled hallways surrounded.

Miyabi’s room reminded Rika of any normal school girl’s room. There was a simplistic twin bed whose foot was next to the door entered. There were some random academic achievements hung on the walls. Then there was a drawer which was right next to the bed. Also, there was a desktop computer in the opposite end of the room, huddled in the corner. It seemed that with this arrangement, Miyabi is a seemingly tidy person and likes it best when its simple.

The room of her older sister, Miki, is saying otherwise.

Miki’s room was just slightly organized, albeit messy and untidy. To Rika, it seemed that Miki was the sort to be organized in ways only she would know. Give Miki the request to find something and she would be able to find it amidst the junk lying about. She had a flat screen TV on the wall, maybe a little less than a meter wide? Regardless, Miki also had a low table with a few cushions around it. Hanging on her walls were various paintings of… iron chefs? Rika blinked again, there was Hiroyuki Sakai, Masahiko Kobe, and many others of that famous melodramatic TV show. Miki’s bed was not made, but she was sure it was at least queen sized…

“Miki’s room, huh…?”

“Yeah, ignore the iron chefs, she has an obsession with that show. Since she’s a cook-to-be and all…” Miyabi waved her hand.

“Yeah but she’s really good at cooking, so it’s all good,” Yuko said hastily as she lead Rika into the other rooms.

Yuko’s room was eerily reminiscent of a savannah, probably to house a lioness such as her. The room was almost entirely beige or was a color based off of it. There was a long drawer with random odd artifacts (of Japanese folklore, Rika thought) strewn across it. There was also a ceiling fan in front of the king-sized bed. In fact, the bed had all the netting and such, making it seem like it was fit for a princess. If anything, Rika definitely believed this sister of the Fujimotos to be the most extravagant of them all. She wouldn’t find it surprising if Yuko happened to have a love of wearing furs with leopard print.

Rika came to realize that there were at least four big rooms in the inner hallway diagonals (call it the shape of a drunken square if you must) while there were two more rooms in the outer. The rooms she had just visited were in the outer square, and they all had their own balconies; there was the exception of Miyabi’s room, which was diagonal of Miki’s room within the four big rooms of the center. Yuko and Miyabi showed her that the other rooms were simply guest rooms. All of them had the exact same simplistic theme as Miyabi’s room, only they alternated between color themes of dark blue and light blue. The room Rika was to be staying in had a light blue theme… And happened to be right next to…

“What do you mean I have to stay in the room next to her room?!” Rika yelled, pointing accusingly at Miki’s room.

“I dunno, assassins might come through your window?” Yuko shrugged, “Besides, Miyabi’s room is right across from your room.”

“Yeah but…!” Rika waved her pointing finger rapidly, “Miki will be ahead of the Shibatas! She’ll probably ravage me in my sleep or something!”

“Haha! As if! You know I just made her wear those bands just now!” Yuko laughed.

“Yeah yeah… keep talking…”

Speak of the devil.

Miki appeared next to them looking slightly gruff, probably from all the shocking that the bands did from her struggling to take them off. Rika wasn’t sure whether to pity her or laugh at her, but she kept silent.

“As for wardrobe, since everyone’s about the same size, just borrow our clothes until we buy you a new set of wardrobe.”

“Oh! I can’t burden you with that sort of thing! I can work and pay for my own new clothes!” Rika looked at Yuko.

“No need to be nice, you’re living here and this is our house, we’re protecting you,” Miyabi retorted.

Rika looked at the three sisters with a look of inferiority. Despite being weird and eccentric, they are still wealthy and productive. Rika’s family definitely weren’t as rich as this, but the Shibata family is definitely richer than the Fujimoto family…

“Thank you for your hospitality, I will find some way to repay you…” Rika bowed to the sisters.

“Such a kind girl...” Yuko laughed, “you can help around by joining the staff.”

“Cleaning staff?” Rika raised a brow.

“No silly! The maids under Kei’s charge are doing that. Yuko-nee was referring to the dancing staff. You could help us by assisting us in whatever, whether it be Yuko-nee and her classes, Miki-nee in her cooking preparations, or me with my studies,” Miyabi said with a smile.

“University student, right? You can make yourself useful in many ways here,” Miki said nonchalantly, “I’m off doing my business of lunch, have fun!” the chopstick woman went off, itching her neck where the collar resided.

“Is she always like that?”

“Yup. Miki the lazyass. But show her a kitchen and she’s happy.”

“For someone like that… Why does she like to cook?” Rika looked at the taller teen.

“Why don’t you ask Miki-nee herself?” Miyabi replied, “Anywho, we need to take you out shopping!”

Introductions have been officially made.

“Still not awake, huh?” came a voice behind Hitomi.

Hitomi turned in her chair, facing the door in which someone was obscuring the way. “I’ve seen you a few times before.”

“Of course you have, silly!” The other woman took another chair and went on the other side of Ayumi’s bed and sat down. “I’m one of the scientists back from the lab.”

“So that’s where I last saw you…” Hitomi smiled, “What reason do you have to come here for?”

“Let’s start by telling you about me!” the woman smiled widely, reaching over to give Hitomi what seemed to be her business card, “I am Abe Natsumi! I’m into anime and video games! My kind of lover has to nice and macho, like Kilik from the Soul Calibur series! Nice to meet you!”

“Uh… Kay… Nice to meet you too…” Hitomi raised a brow. Why do we have an anime/gaming otaku on the staff…?

“But please call me Nacchi, please? Please treat me well from now on~!”

Hitomi could have sworn that if they were speaking on a chatting service, Natsumi would have added a heart to just about everything she said. It wasn’t that she found the scientist annoying, but she’s just a little odd for her tastes.

“I wonder how long Ayumi-chan will stay in this coma… She can’t be down for THAT long… can she?” Natsumi looked over at the sleeping woman’s face.

“Yeah…”

“Oh! I came by to tell you that the chief wants you to go be the surveillance for Ishikawa Rika now. I think he must feel bad for you having to watch someone bedridden for the past four hours.”

“Oh really? How kind of him,” Hitomi smirked.

“So tell me, Hitomi-san, what was it like meeting that maiden?” Natsumi became business-like all of a sudden, interlacing her fingers and resting her chin on them.

“It was a little scary actually… She’s very powerful, despite appearances… I’m just glad I was armed before she could do any damage to me. But I discovered something about myself that was a little funky…”

“And that is?”

“I dunno… All of spells didn’t work on me. It’s like I have this invisible barrier protecting me… What did she call it again, ‘magic nullification’ she said it was?”

“My my, that’s interesting… I’ll have to look into that matter!” an odd glint appeared in Natsumi’s eyes, probably those of a mad scientist’s.

“…Please don’t jump me and experiment on me…” Hitomi went shifty-eyed.

“Don’t worry, I won’t, but that is pretty interesting…” Natsumi stroked her imaginary beard. “Magic nullification, huh? At least you will be useful in the future project…”

“Why isn’t anyone telling me about this future project?”

“Oh, I’ll tell you about the future project then; you’ll be a part of it anyway~!”

“Alright, I’m listening.”

Let us turn the page…

“What a day of shopping!” Rika huffed, ripping tags off of her new clothes and placing them in the closet. Even though they were rich, Rika made sure to buy outfits that were nice and cheap to satisfy even the money savers. They bought enough outfits to mix and match for about a week’s worth before articles were to be reused. Rika argued that this was enough for her to use, but the other family retorted that she must absolutely buy more clothes so that she wouldn’t have to reuse clothing for about a month. As much as this went against Rika’s ‘code’ of outfit wearing, these were still the people who were giving her a roof (an expensive roof at that) to live under, therefore, she must abide by their rules or risk getting the crap beaten out of considering that these generous sisters were composed of a telekinetic lioness, a gunner ninja, and a groping demon who fought with chopsticks.

“I wonder who taught them those things… With their sort of skills… They seem like assassins… Or something like that. Then again, assassins protecting me against assassins are a good idea…”

“What’s this about assassins?” came a voice that startled Rika. Startling her to a point where she even jumped in the air and landed face flat on the floor. Suddenly realizing who the voice belonged to, Rika became even more discomforted. She quickly stood up, arming herself with a coat hanger.

“Whaaat? It’s me, honey, what’s with the threatening glare, huh?” Miki pretended to look hurt and sound like she was offended with Rika’s defensive stance.

“Where did you come from?!”

“You left your balcony door open, so I just jumped from my balcony. Of course, I could’ve killed myself in the process considering that it’s such a wide gap, so you should be concerned for my wellbeing instead of yelling at me, dear.”

“Get out!” Rika brandished her coat hanger threateningly.

“Pssh, this is my house,” Miki scoffed, moving closer to Rika, who decided to dual wield coat hangers.

“Alright fine, get out of my room. I refuse to deal with you unless I decide I want to be abused by you by entering your room.”

Miki showed absolutely no signs of hearing Rika whatsoever. The woman continued advancing forward nonchalantly, feeling unthreatened by the (lack of) skill in dual-wielding.

Rika swung at Miki with her right hand, only to be caught by the wrist by Miki’s left hand. When she tried swinging with her other hand, Miki swerved around with the still caught hand, and then grabbed the other so that the chopstick woman ended up behind Rika, holding both of her wrists from the front making it seem like Rika was hugging herself.

The cursed woman tried to struggle out of the other’s grasp, even resorting to toe-stepping, but it was all shot down in vain: Miki still had her in that intimate grasp.

“So were you jealous when I kissed that woman back there?” Miki asked into Rika’s ear amidst her struggling, “Is that why you’re trying to avoid me?”

“Anyone would stay clear of a groping demon like you,” Rika retorted, skillfully dodging having to answer that question.

“I don’t grope THAT much… Maybe five times a day or something,” Miki smirked.

“Oh, five times a day isn’t ‘that much’ to you, eh?” Rika finally stopped struggling, knowing that she couldn’t escape, “It is to everyone else.”

“It’s better than being shot at by some assassins five times a day, so you should be thankful that you’re in this house and that I, along with my sisters, are your guardians…” Rika’s skin began crawling with goosebumps, hearing Miki sound so husky and even lusty in her ears. Even though the other woman was right in a sense, that Rika would rather be molested by Miki than be killed by firing squads, but still…

“Don’t you have a million other people to go pining for besides me? I’m sure there’s better.”

“Nah, I’m too lazy to go out, so you will do…” Miki proceeded to nuzzle against Rika’s neck, leaving a wet trail of kisses, “And besides, you taste better than a lot of them…” Evidentally, this woman wasn’t all about flirting, she was good with her tongue too… For Rika felt herself growing flustered at the contact.

Of all the times I ACTUALLY want that spirit to take over, how come it isn’t happening?! Isn’t it supposed to take over me whenever I’m in situations like these?! Rika internally yelled at herself, trying to stop that inevitable blush that’s coming to her. She hated this woman advancing on her like that, but why did her advance have to be so… arousing?

“Please… Just stop it right now? I order you to stop,” Rika nearly pleaded if it weren’t for that strong tone in her voice. After a few seconds of not obeying that order, Miki’s bands proceeded to shock her, making her jump back at the familiar pain. “Thank you,” Rika said, referring to the bands as she rubbed at the places where Miki had kissed. “Now I order you to leave this room now.”

Miki didn’t question Rika’s words. She let out a smirk, nonverbally telling her that she was saved by the bands and won’t hesitate to keep going if she had lacked them before she left.

Rika sighed, letting herself collapse on the bed. This was her first day staying and Miki already tried to get into her pants? At least she figured how to use the bands efficiently. Just add use the “I order you” as a prefix and it will not be able to be disobeyed, otherwise Miki will be faced with electrical consequences.

“Let’s see how the rest of the day pans out. If the rest goes smoothly, I think I’ll be able to have a good night sleep.”

…And take a step closer…

The time of darkness rolled quickly onto the sky, turning all which it trailed behind into a darkness vaguely illuminated by the shining stars, giving the land beneath them a black and white visage. Some would call it creepy, for the spell of loneliness cast upon the world below would be bothersome and frightening. Some would call it beautiful, for the spell of shadows cast upon the world below would awe should admirers stop to gaze.

There was one admirer that did stop.

But this admirer was not fascinated by the imageries provided by the light of darkness.

She was interested in something else.

Someone else, rather.

Hitomi sat on a tree branch, side leaning against the tree trunk, watching Rika sleep by the window. With her given angle, she knew Miki wouldn’t be able to see her from her window, considering the wide gap between balconies. Unless that woman was crazy enough to jump across three meters of air to try and ravage the poor cursed woman or something...

“So weren’t you jealous when she kissed me?” Hitomi asked in a smile. “Were you thinking of me when she was kissing your neck?” That smile lessened.

“In truth, there was something in me that felt a little irked when she did that…” the guard crossed her arms as she leaned her head against the trunk as well. “So is that the feeling of jealousy? I can’t say I liked that feeling, but I’m going to have to get used to it. Not supposed to make myself stalking you known to you after all, Rika…”

She wondered if talking to herself was a favorite past time, but digressed.

“Emotions really are interesting… I wonder if any other amnesiac person feels new to this sort of thing as I am…” Hitomi straightened herself out, her back feeling awkward at an angle.

“You seem to make me question myself, and that’s a new thing, Rika… Normally I’d just do anything without really thinking about it. When I learned something new, I never asked questions, I just knew it as it is… But with you… Now you make me want to question things I’ve learned…Is that love? Or is it just the feeling of curiosity?”

Nothing answered her.

Only silence accompanied her.

“Which is it?”

“What’s the feeling that’s supposed to be ‘love’ like?”

A half-malicious grin.

A half-happy glare.

Together, a scheming smile.

“Only you could answer that, Rika.”

Closer to the end…

“Ah! A good sleep for once!” Rika stretched out her arms. This was the second night where her dream lacked spirits and blood and all that other gorey icky stuff she had hated. But then she blinked again. She sighed in relief afterwards though.

“First night in this house, eh?” the cursed woman rose in bed, looking around her. Everything was exactly as she remembered, so she didn’t worry about Miki trespassing. She was sure to lock the balcony too, in case that crazy chopstick woman was daring to make that big jump again. She rolled sluggishly off the bed, landing on her feet when she came to the end of it. Then she fixed the covers and the pillows to make it look like no one had ever touched it. Looking at the clock, it was seven in the morning. In another hour, she would have been preparing for her ten o’clock class, but that wasn’t the case here.

She had to become accustomed to a new life. Life without university. Life without normalcy. Life without Ayumi.

She wanted to hate it. She really did. But these people are protecting her from being killed. She had no choice.

Without a question, obligatory showering was needed.

Rika grabbed a set of clothes chosen for the day and a spare towel the family provided for her and went off to the bathroom of the upper floor.

Hitomi said Ayumi was fine but… With all those scars, are they even healing?

I wonder if Hitomi’s healing well too… The scars I gave her didn’t seem too bad…

Does the Shibata company know where I am?

They probably do, but it’s probably stupid of them to try and rush me while still here… So they must be plot—


She had happened to walk in on a fully naked Miki, who just got out of the shower.

Rika became flustered. Flustered with anger that is.

“Um… Hey?”

BAM SLAP BOP POW WHAM SNAP CRUNCH BASH SLAM KAPOW

“This is so WRONG!” Miki retorted as she rubbed her cheek with an ice pack. “YOU walked in on ME!”

“Who cares? It was disgusting to see in the morning!” Rika said as she ate some rice from the bowl she was holding with her chopsticks.

“What do you mean disgusting? I have what you have, so you’re saying the same about yourself!”

“What do you mean you have what I have? You have half of what I have!” Rika motioned to Miki’s chest with her chopsticks.

“OH NO YOU DIN’T!” Miki snapped her fingers three times in a diagonal manner like those of stereotypical American preps/cheerleaders.

“OH YES I DID! I WENT THERE!” Rika also snapped her fingers in the same manner.

“Bah, you’re only here because a woman past her prime made me bring you here!” Miki retorted as she hastily shoved the food in her mouth, unknown of the rather demonic presence towering behind her with glowing grey eyes with an aura that was even stronger than the devil’s.

Watching Rika’s rather frightened expression, Miki couldn’t help but wonder what sort of monster was behind her. But then the realization of the words she said before hit her… She slowly turned around, catching a very dark figure standing behind her…

“WHO’S PAST HER PRIME, HUH?! YOU PUNK!” Yuko screamed, “I ORDER YOU TO APOLOGIZE RIGHT NOW!”

“I’M—” Miki began her apology, but the electric shocks from the bands saw to her first and immediately, the chopstick woman began fidgeting abnormally and twitching from the unusually powerful shocks she was receiving at the moment. “I-I’M S-s-SOR-SORRY!” She managed to shout out amidst her electrocution.

“Itadakimasu~!” Yuko sat down, delightfully eating nonchalantly, ignoring the twitching sister next to her.

Then Miyabi came in, still in her pajama pants and T-shirt. Before she sat down, she sniffed the air, before looking down at Miki.

“Did you burn something, Neesan?”

How will each day from now on be like?


















Hope there were a few nice giggles there xD I'll probably start enforcing the comment rule a little after chapter ten or so. SO YOU LURKERS BETTER ENJOY YOUR FREEDOM WHILE YOU CAN! <3

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Re: Our Cursed Gift II [NOT A SEQUEL] Chapter 7: And so the Battle Begins.
« Reply #112 on: July 24, 2007, 02:31:35 AM »
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I was amused by the chapter. Oh man, the hilarity. Haha, I'm too lazy for an indepth comment today. :P

Interesting how Miki assaults Rika but Rika didn't transform. Hm, so she actually has to care about the person before she gets affected by the transformation? Interesting. XD And I like how Rika kicked Miki's ass when she walked in on that groping demon. XDDD So illogical, but eh. And that argument afterwards...XDDD

Hm, scheming Yossi. You really like that caricature, don't you? :P

Oh, I almost forgot, otaku Nacchi~ <3333 XDDD I wonder what exactly is this project she told Yossi about? Mm.

Update soon~
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More than a few giggles, actually. Even if Miki was so pwn'd in this chappie, I really enjoyed reading it. After all, she managed to arouse Rika a little...  :rofl:

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“Undergoing shock or just angry at the events which accumulated ‘til now?” Miki rested her arms on the table, on of which was raised so Miki could rest her head against it, losing all energy of the day’s events and now simply looking lazy, lethargic, and bored.
In other words, being normal for Miki. :P



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“The Shibata family. They’ve killed women like you before. They would find anyone with any trace of that tennyo’s ancestry and eliminate them to prevent the tennyo from appearing. As for how they do that, I think they take the date of when they kill the maiden’s host and keep an eye on the people born on that death date.”
Damn, the Shibatas must have "eyes and ears" that reach far into every prefecture/city of Japan (and possibly even worldwide).  To be to do this, they'd have to have records on their observations of these various families going back who knows how long! :o


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“So the Shibata family… Are they only looking for the maiden that would resurface as a whole instead of just people who merely have the blood in them?”
You know what, I can't help but wonder now...just how well does Rika really know Shiba-chan? More importantly, under what circumstances did they first meet and become friends? As much as I hate to say it, I'm starting to wonder if their friendship was "planned" by the Shibatas to monitor Rika more closely. It could be that they had strong suspicions about the chances that she would be "the one".


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“Don’t become too emo, I have the blood in me too,” Yuko said, holding her hand out in the air and then a on the other side of the tatami mat room they resided in, a scroll hanging on the wall unhooked itself, then rolled itself, and then came levitating towards Yuko’s hand, much to the shock of Miyabi and Rika (along with Miki and Kei, who had paused in their commotion to stare in awe).

“My power is telekinesis. I have the slight tennyo influence in me, but it’s definitely not like you, who is genuine descendant.”
WTF, Yuko had these abilities and NO ONE (not even Kei the housekeeper) knew about them??? How the hell did Yuko learn to control these powers so well, anyway?

It's probably a good thing that it's not Miki that can't do telekinesis like Yuko can, otherwise she'd be messing with girls' skirts/panties/bra straps long-distance style. :lol:


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“Wait! So that means you cheated! All that throwing knife crap about you is fake because all you did was use your telekinesis to control your aim!”

“So what if it’s fake?! It’s still freaking useful and kept me alive in dreaded situations where I’ve been chased by bears when I was looking at hidden shrines in forests!”
Indeed. So long as it helps the end result, it's all good. :yep:


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“Oh, one last thing…” Yuko said to Miki as she searched for something in the sleeve of her kimono, “Hmm… Where is it… Ah ha!” Yuko took out a rather interesting collar and what seemed to be matching wristbands. The design seem to irk Rika however, for it had the patterns of dark blue outlines of lotuses and butterflies sewn on black material. “The collar can stretch out really far, so you shouldn’t have problems putting it around your neck.”

“Weird lookin’, but I’ll wear it for awhile before I’ll rip it to shreds,” Miki said in a fake giddy high voice before putting on the aforementioned objects.

It didn’t look too bad, Rika thought to herself. The collar part did look a bit cute with Miki’s neck, and the wrist bands seem even bigger than the normal for it had extended from her wrist to almost her elbow…

“I call them the ‘bitch bands of doom’ and I made them myself!”

...

“Nevertheless, SUCKER~!” Yuko made a childish face by pulling on her bottom eyelid and sticking her tongue out, “now that you put them on, you can’t take them off unless we tennyo bloods permit you to!”

“Say what?!” Miki tried to go for her collar but as she pulled outstretched it too far trying to pull it off, there was an electric spark administered to her wristbands which caused her to scream out in pain. “Damn it…” Miki was laying on the floor, twitching and convulsing as if she was having a seizure, much to everyone else’s amusement.
Well, that's ONE way of keeping Miki from groping people when she's not supposed to. :rofl:

Oh wait! Yuko said that people with tennyo blood can control the bands, right? That means Rika can control them too, doesn't it??? XD


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Miki’s room was just slightly organized, albeit messy and untidy.

...

Hanging on her walls were various paintings of… iron chefs? Rika blinked again, there was Hiroyuki Sakai, Masahiko Kobe, and many others of that famous melodramatic TV show. Miki’s bed was not made, but she was sure it was at least queen sized…

“Miki’s room, huh…?”

“Yeah, ignore the iron chefs, she has an obsession with that show. Since she’s a cook-to-be and all…” Miyabi waved her hand.
IRON CHEF!!! I (like this story's Miki-sama) LOVE THAT SHOW!!! :w00t:

BTW, Michiba-san FTMFW!!! :rockon:


A queen-sized bed, eh? Miki must get lonely sleeping all by herself in that big ol' bed. :pimp:


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“What do you mean I have to stay in the room next to her room?!” Rika yelled, pointing accusingly at Miki’s room.

“I dunno, assassins might come through your window?” Yuko shrugged, “Besides, Miyabi’s room is right across from your room.”

“Yeah but…!” Rika waved her pointing finger rapidly, “Miki will be ahead of the Shibatas! She’ll probably ravage me in my sleep or something!”
Oh come now, it wouldn't be THAT bad. Besides, Rika could always pretend it was Yossi instead of Miki. :twisted:


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“Haha! As if! You know I just made her wear those bands just now!” Yuko laughed.
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...way to plan ahead there Yuko. :thumbsup


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“But please call me Nacchi, please? Please treat me well from now on~!”

Hitomi could have sworn that if they were speaking on a chatting service, Natsumi would have added a heart to just about everything she said.
I can definitely see Nacchi doing that! :hee:


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“So tell me, Hitomi-san, what was it like meeting that maiden?” Natsumi became business-like all of a sudden, interlacing her fingers and resting her chin on them.

“It was a little scary actually… She’s very powerful, despite appearances… I’m just glad I was armed before she could do any damage to me. But I discovered something about myself that was a little funky…”

“And that is?”

“I dunno… All of spells didn’t work on me. It’s like I have this invisible barrier protecting me… What did she call it again, ‘magic nullification’ she said it was?”

“My my, that’s interesting… I’ll have to look into that matter!” an odd glint appeared in Natsumi’s eyes, probably those of a mad scientist’s.
It's nice to see an outsider's POV on the situation. So far all we've seen or heard of Maki is just from the context of the family history of the Shibatas and from the folktale that Yuko told Rika.  An outsider's POV can give insight that one might not otherwise have had they been otherwise involved.

I wonder if Nacchi might be able to figure out the "magic nullification" thing that protected Yossi? If so, they might be able to re-create it and have something to use as a defense against Maki's attacks.


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Natsumi stroked her imaginary beard. “Magic nullification, huh? At least you will be useful in the future project…”

“Why isn’t anyone telling me about this future project?”

“Oh, I’ll tell you about the future project then; you’ll be a part of it anyway~!”
So it's already been determined that Yossi's going to be in this future project? Why is that? What if she regains her memories, will that disqualify or somehow invalidate her use in the project? If so, perhaps the Shibatas really have been lying to her about trying to find a way to help her. If that's the case, Yossi's gonna be pretty pissed.


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Rika made sure to buy outfits that were nice and cheap to satisfy even the money savers. They bought enough outfits to mix and match for about a week’s worth before articles were to be reused. Rika argued that this was enough for her to use, but the other family retorted that she must absolutely buy more clothes so that she wouldn’t have to reuse clothing for about a month.As much as this went against Rika’s ‘code’ of outfit wearing, these were still the people who were giving her a roof (an expensive roof at that) to live under, therefore, she must abide by their rules or risk getting the crap beaten out of considering that these generous sisters were composed of a telekinetic lioness, a gunner ninja, and a groping demon who fought with chopsticks.
So Rika "gave in" and bought more clothes (which she herself would not actually pay for) so that she could live and be protected in a mansion, where she'd earn her keep helping with dance classes/cooking/tutoring?

Poor Rika, she has it so hard right now. [/sarcasm] :D


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“Whaaat? It’s me, honey, what’s with the threatening glare, huh?” Miki pretended to look hurt and sound like she was offended with Rika’s defensive stance.

...

“Get out!” Rika brandished her coat hanger threateningly.

“Pssh, this is my house,” Miki scoffed, moving closer to Rika, who decided to dual wield coat hangers.
* JFC pictures Rika in a defensive stance, armed with "dual coat hangers".

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:on lol:

Now we get to see if those collars will respond to Rika like how they responded to Yuko.


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“Don’t you have a million other people to go pining for besides me? I’m sure there’s better.”

“Nah, I’m too lazy to go out, so you will do…” Miki proceeded to nuzzle against Rika’s neck, leaving a wet trail of kisses, “And besides, you taste better than a lot of them…” Evidentally, this woman wasn’t all about flirting, she was good with her tongue too… For Rika felt herself growing flustered at the contact.

Of all the times I ACTUALLY want that spirit to take over, how come it isn’t happening?! Isn’t it supposed to take over me whenever I’m in situations like these?! Rika internally yelled at herself, trying to stop that inevitable blush that’s coming to her. She hated this woman advancing on her like that, but why did her advance have to be so… arousing?
Well, I suppose yes and no would be the answer here. Yes, signs so far indicate that Maki emerges when Rika gets "aroused". But NO, it doesn't necessarily mean that she'll automatically come out every single time that Rika's heartbeat starts to pick up. In all likelihood the circumstances that allow Maki to emerge are probably more complex than one would initially imagine.  Even though Miki right now has Rika in a situation where she can get "aroused", Rika won't see it, treat it, or react to it the same way because it's something that's basically being forced on her. She's not attracted to Miki, so it's not the same as when she was "aroused" by Yossi, whom Rika DOES find attractive.


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“Please… Just stop it right now? I order you to stop,” Rika nearly pleaded if it weren’t for that strong tone in her voice. After a few seconds of not obeying that order, Miki’s bands proceeded to shock her, making her jump back at the familiar pain. “Thank you,” Rika said, referring to the bands as she rubbed at the places where Miki had kissed. “Now I order you to leave this room now.”

Miki didn’t question Rika’s words. She let out a smirk, nonverbally telling her that she was saved by the bands and won’t hesitate to keep going if she had lacked them before she left.
Rika probably just has to be firmer/more decisive in her tone when she issues an "order" like that. If she does that, then there probably won't be so much of a delay in the bands' reaction.

Incidentally, I wonder if Miki's gonna keep trying to push this to see how far she can get with Rika? :?


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Hitomi sat on a tree branch, side leaning against the tree trunk, watching Rika sleep by the window. With her given angle, she knew Miki wouldn’t be able to see her from her window, considering the wide gap between balconies. Unless that woman was crazy enough to jump across three meters of air to try and ravage the poor cursed woman or something...
As we've just read, apparently she was.  :grin:


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“So weren’t you jealous when she kissed me?” Hitomi asked in a smile. “Were you thinking of me when she was kissing your neck?” That smile lessened.
If I didn't know better, I'd think that Yossi sounds like she wants/hopes that Rika WAS jealous and that Rika WAS thinking about her.


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“In truth, there was something in me that felt a little irked when she did that…” the guard crossed her arms as she leaned her head against the trunk as well. “So is that the feeling of jealousy? I can’t say I liked that feeling, but I’m going to have to get used to it. Not supposed to make myself stalking you known to you after all, Rika…”
Exactly how long has Yossi been in that tree? She obviously does her job very, VERY well. The Shibatas also evidently have very good intelligence, considering that they must know Rika is here since Yossi is watching her.


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“Ah! A good sleep for once!” Rika stretched out her arms.

...

She wanted to hate it. She really did. But these people are protecting her from being killed. She had no choice.

Without a question, obligatory showering was needed.

Rika grabbed a set of clothes chosen for the day and a spare towel the family provided for her and went off to the bathroom of the upper floor.

...

She had happened to walk in on a fully naked Miki, who just got out of the shower.
Hot dayum!  NEKKID MIKI!  :drool:


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BAM SLAP BOP POW WHAM SNAP CRUNCH BASH SLAM KAPOW

“This is so WRONG!” Miki retorted as she rubbed her cheek with an ice pack. “YOU walked in on ME!”

“Who cares? It was disgusting to see in the morning!” Rika said as she ate some rice from the bowl she was holding with her chopsticks.
Beating up a wet, nekkid woman first thing in the morning...what a way to start the day.  :shakeit:


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I have what you have, so you’re saying the same about yourself!”

“What do you mean you have what I have? You have half of what I have!” Rika motioned to Miki’s chest with her chopsticks.

“OH NO YOU DIN’T!” Miki snapped her fingers three times in a diagonal manner like those of stereotypical American preps/cheerleaders.

“OH YES I DID! I WENT THERE!” Rika also snapped her fingers in the same manner.
OHSNAP!!!  :hiakhiakhiak:


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“Bah, you’re only here because a woman past her prime made me bring you here!” Miki retorted as she hastily shoved the food in her mouth, unknown of the rather demonic presence towering behind her with glowing grey eyes with an aura that was even stronger than the devil’s.

Watching Rika’s rather frightened expression, Miki couldn’t help but wonder what sort of monster was behind her. But then the realization of the words she said before hit her… She slowly turned around, catching a very dark figure standing behind her…

“WHO’S PAST HER PRIME, HUH?! YOU PUNK!” Yuko screamed, “I ORDER YOU TO APOLOGIZE RIGHT NOW!”

“I’M—” Miki began her apology, but the electric shocks from the bands saw to her first and immediately, the chopstick woman began fidgeting abnormally and twitching from the unusually powerful shocks she was receiving at the moment. “I-I’M S-s-SOR-SORRY!” She managed to shout out amidst her electrocution.

“Itadakimasu~!” Yuko sat down, delightfully eating nonchalantly, ignoring the twitching sister next to her.

Then Miyabi came in, still in her pajama pants and T-shirt. Before she sat down, she sniffed the air, before looking down at Miki.

“Did you burn something, Neesan?”
Too much EPICNESS and WINZ for me to make a sufficiently adequate comment other than:

Miki calling Yuko "Past her Prime" -   :mon sigh:
Rika sees Yuko behind Miki -  :scared:

Miki puzzled -  :dunno:

Yuko -  :temper: :scolding: :angry1:

Miki -   :dizzy: :imdead:

Yuko -  :mon corn: :mon noodle:

Miyabi looking at Miki on the floor -  :mon huh:

JFC -  :mon lmao:
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Just to jump start this thread a bit since it was feeling lonely with just Estrea, Sai, Loser, JFC, and Glcorps commenting on it the majority of the time D:




What do you think of this story thus far? Is it any better than the first OCG? Worse than the first OCG? Tell me why you think so about one or the other.

...Because I do intend to create Eight OCG's in all.

Because I'm insane like that xD

Nevertheless, give me your input about the sort of genre I should pursue. The first four OCGs are mainly experiments. The next four I haven't planned yet, except for six which was actually the door to Darkness if you remember that poem thing back in the first thread.

But my main question is, I want you all to compare the two OCGs. What was exclusive to this and exclusive to that? Actually, you don't have to answer that one, it's a stupid question. Just compare them and tell me which one you think is better and tell me why xD

I really shouldn't be asking this since this IS still just the 'beginning'...

There's definitely going to be shocking situations in the future.

And I WILL warn you all ahead of time. Something that was amiss in OCG 1 will be present in OCG II: Death.

Excuse my disgressing again, but anywho :]...


Big question: Which one sucks and which one's better and tell me why you think the other's better. xD
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Okay, I like OCG II better than OCG I because II is less confusing :D! Also, OCG II has nice pacing, with serious chapters mized in with funny chapters, rather than the bigass block of soft fuzzy funny stuff, and then a bigass block of me smashing my computer because I hate Rika so much. And also, two words and an acronym that sum up what was supposed to be my craptastic former chapter comment.

Fujimoto. Family. FTMFW.

That is all. *skips off to write his amazingly craptastic fanfic as well as escaping from Yuu-sama for having such a short comment*
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Ok, I'm coming out of lurk mode because I feel real guilty about:

1) It got to me when I read your  "jump start this thread a bit since it was feeling lonely"
2) Not commenting on such a great story.

I've read every chapter and this story is just so addicting. I find this being one of the stories on the top of my list that I hope are updated frequently.

Now Comparing it too OCG I, I never read that story because I didn't really discover it until it's late chapters, and it was hard to catch up, but I went back and read some chapters and understood the plot. I liked what I read. Comparing that to OCG II, I defiantly prefer OCG II, the plot, the characters' personalities.  Anways, I have to agree with Tanachan on this one;

Fujimoto. Family. FTMFW.

but let me just add; Fujimoto. Family. FTMFW. X2!!
I love that family

Wow, and I also can't believe you plan on writing 8 OCG's. Seeing how long the first one was.. You'll probably become our H!P fanfic's J.K Rowling or something  :lol:
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What do you think of this story thus far? Is it any better than the first OCG? Worse than the first OCG? Tell me why you think so about one or the other.

...Because I do intend to create Eight OCG's in all.
Personally, I'm loving it. It's totally different from the first OCG, so it's hard for me to say that one is better than the other.  What I CAN say is that I love the way you mix the serious/dramatic moments with the funny/silly ones.  It helps keep the readers coming back if you stir things around a bit.

But WTF 8 OCGs? What are you, insane??? :O


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Because I'm insane like that xD
Ah, okay then. :P


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And I WILL warn you all ahead of time. Something that was amiss in OCG 1 will be present in OCG II: Death.
You better not kill Miki...or...or...or...

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* JFC tries to think of a suitable threat

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OR I WON'T DO MY LEET COMMENTARIES ANYMORE! :scolding:


Anyways, with the OCG 1:
- definitive lead character (Reina)
- love story (ReinaxMaki)
- setting remains within the "H!P world" (i.e. the girls are all still in H!P)
- many more side-stories (e.g. Aichan's trying to break the curse; Rika's split-personalities; Erika pining for Yui; etc.), sometimes it was hard to keep them all straight, especially when you'd jump from one to another with each new chapter.


With OCG 2:
- a single, main focus for the story (Shibata-clan VS Rika)
- H!P girls in a "non-H!P world"
- an old fight being fought in modern times (Maki VS those that wronged her)
- a "wildcard" character (Yossi)
- no significant "love story" (Rika's crush on Yossi doesn't count, nor does it currently compare with ReinaxMaki in OCG1)

That's all I can think of for now. Seeing as how the current story is unfinished, it's not really right to say that one is better than the other, IMO. After all, we don't know what lies in store in future chapters. Comparing a completed story to an uncompleted one just isn't right. You can't compare a cake that's fully baked and topped with icing to one that's only partway through the baking process. The comparison would be totally off and invalid.


One thing I WILL say...MIKI-SAMA FTMFWMF!!! :rockon:
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Well I did say it was the 'beginning' after all xD

I'm going to ask this question again after 25 chapters or so xD

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