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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #320 on: May 19, 2008, 03:13:18 PM »
Lol, is this the part where Yossy wakes up and thinks something happened and then Maki ends up getting punched on the face or something like that..?  :D

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #321 on: May 19, 2008, 03:31:32 PM »
oooo it was very nice reading that  :yep:
"Okaaaaaaay!" she giggled. She tried to get up and ended up falling over the table again, landing right where she'd started. She stared up at me. "That. was. AWESOME."

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"Yossy, why are you getting naked?!" I exclaimed, unable to tear my eyes away from her lean, muscular form as she stripped down.

"Duh. Shower," she replied, looking at me like I was the crazy one. She reached around and made several unsuccessful attempts to unhook her bra. I started laughing at her predicament.
HAHAHAHA  XD
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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #322 on: May 19, 2008, 03:36:17 PM »
Love this update! It went from  XD ----->  :cry: But I like it that way, gotta keep it interesting! Man, drunk Yossy = good times! I like when she referenced to the gomaki penguin! And the push-up was nice!  :yep: Poor Maki, she's too hard on herself. I mean, sure she kissed her but that was it! She shouldn't have done it but at least it was only a kiss. (Even though she gets punished for much more) Maki really needs a new girl and I vote AYAYA!!!!!!!

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #323 on: May 19, 2008, 03:55:49 PM »
 Poor Maki......

I love Maki... It's so sweet what she did. But if it was me I would have called Miki up to tell her I found her and she is allright. Wow, that would have totally made the whole second installment redundant.

 I loved it... Nice and short and some funniness but mostly emo.. Hope the new chapter comes out prin mas gastrosoune XD I hope u keep up the good work... And update more often please.

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #324 on: May 19, 2008, 10:02:48 PM »
So Maki wasn't completely innocent. I knew that it was an unlikely story that she didn't touch Yossie at all. At least she didn't sleep  with her and only kissed her.

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #325 on: May 19, 2008, 10:47:56 PM »
Ah, who am I kidding? I was smashed myself, but thanks to Yuuchan's fine example, I'm pretty good at acting normal while drunk.

Yuuchan is a master :mon heh:


"Heeeey, it's Goto Maki. Go-to Ma-ki. Gomaki. Hey, remember when we were penguins? That was awesome," she started laughing a little. I glanced over at the bartender, trying my best to focus through my own haze.
ok, that was cute  :mon inluv: gomaki penguin monogatari rulz!  :mon cigar:

"HA!"
she laughed triumphantly. "I kept telling her it was just a push-up, but she didn't believe me."

"Right, whatever," I muttered, half dragging her laughing, grope-happy, drunk ass down the street.
mauajaujajajaj that's funny!!  :mon lmao:

"Yossy, why are you getting naked?!" I exclaimed, unable to tear my eyes away from her lean, muscular form as she stripped down.

"Duh. Shower," she replied, looking at me like I was the crazy one. She reached around and made several unsuccessful attempts to unhook her bra. I started laughing at her predicament.

A tiny voice in the back of my mind started yelling at me "Bad Maki! Very bad! Step away from the naked Yoshizawa," but I was too far gone to listen to it.  I walked over to her and, not quite knowing what I was doing, ran my hands up her back and unhooked her bra. She looked into my eyes, her expression unreadable.

Maki=  :mon blood:

Yossy=  :mon unsure:... :mon bath: and naked :mon evillaff:

maujajajaja bad maki! the best ever :mon XD:

"Miki left me for Aya," she said quietly before I could even ask. My eyes widened. She looked away. "I just wish I could forget everything. Even just for a moment."

I can blame being drunk. I can blame the steam from the shower. I can blame the water coursing along her naked body. But, it was those words that did it. Her speaking aloud my thoughts from our last close moment together... from what should have been our first time together. Those words seeping into my alcohol-soaked brain. I thought it was a sign that this was meant to be. That this was my chance to fix my mistake from all those years ago.

So I kissed her.

NOOOOO maki...  :mon wtf: at least it was only a kiss   :mon dunno:

"I know how that is," I muttered.

"What?" I lifted my head and looked her straight in the eye.

"I know how it is to be in love with someone no matter what has happened between the two of you." She didn't say anything. I sighed and stepped out of the shower.

"You don't mean..."

"You need to sleep," I replied, pulling a towel around myself. "Just grab one of the shirts out of my closet or something. Everything's still in the same place."

"Maki...?"

"I need to cool down, sorry," I said shortly, walking out of the bathroom and shutting the door behind me.

oooooooook... that was a indirect surely direct  :mon ko: poor maki  :mon runcry:

"Maki!? It's Miki. I... It's a long story. But, just... I don't know... Please, if you see Yossy, send her home. I need to... It wasn't what she thought. It's all... Just, please send her home... Or at least... just... just tell her I love her." Click.

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wainting next chapter!!
« Last Edit: May 19, 2008, 11:15:08 PM by Yukari »

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #326 on: May 19, 2008, 10:50:50 PM »
Oh FUCK! How could I have not realized it was Konkon!?!?!?  :hiakhiakhiak:



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And I won't quote the emoticon post, but epic as always. I once told someone "JFC is the caviar of fic comments" ^^
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I had gotten a random phone call from a childhood friend and somehow our old group ended up having a little reunion at the bar down the street from my apartment. Now, I've been around some heavy drinkers, but these girls were nuts. It wasn't long until they were completely smashed and I was pretty damn buzzed myself.
Man, those crazy Hokkaido girls.  O0



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I was just about to wander home to sober up a bit when the bartender called me back inside.

"What?" I asked, walking over to him. "Did I miss one?"

"Not exactly," he said carefully. "I mean, she wasn't part of your group, but I think she's a friend of yours, isn't she?" He gestured over at the figure sitting alone at the far corner of the bar, her hair spilling down in front of her face like a curtain, her long slender fingers absentmindedly playing with the rim of the empty glass in front of her. I recognized her immediately.

"Yocchan?" I said softly, coming up next to her. She jerked her head up and looked at me in confusion for a minute before a look of recognition spread across her face.

"Heeeey, it's Goto Maki. Go-to Ma-ki. Gomaki. Hey, remember when we were penguins? That was awesome," she started laughing a little.
EH!?? :shocked: And here I thought it was Miki that had gotten plastered.

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Uh oh...Maki and Yossi...in a bar...drunk...AGAIN! :stunned:

What is it with these too that they always run into each other this way? :lol:

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Actually, come to think of it...Maki knows about "the bet", right?  :gmon blonde:

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And yeah, the penguins WERE awesome.  :pen_whirl:



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"How much has she had?" I asked him.

"I'm not sure," he replied. "She was already here when my shift started and she's had quite a bit since then." I felt my phone start to vibrate in my pocket. Without even glancing at it, I hit the button to send the call straight to voice mail. I had enough to deal with right now.
Wow...that...is a lot of boozin.

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Wonder who the call was from?




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"Whatever. I guess we'll go sober up together, then." I grunted a little as the tall Gatas captain leaned heavily against me and started laughing again. Ugh, she absolutely reeked of liquor. As we stumbled out the front door, I felt a familiar hand creeping up my shirt. Of course. "Yocchan..." I sighed.

"HA!" she laughed triumphantly. "I kept telling her it was just a push-up, but she didn't believe me."

"Right, whatever," I muttered, half dragging her laughing, grope-happy, drunk ass down the street.
Oh boy.  It must have been a while since the events of the last chapter. Yossi must be....um....pretty..."antsy" again.  :bleed eyes:



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I was pretty impressed when we got to my apartment. We only had to stop once for her to puke on the way.

As I walked inside, I flicked on the lights and let go of her to lock the door behind us. A loud crash startled me and I physically jumped and whirled around. She had somehow fallen over my coffee table and was now lying on the floor, laughing her ass off. I groaned. I was waaaaaay too drunk to babysit her like this.
Wait a sec...

* JFC reads that part again.


Is this?

* JFC reads that part a third time.


HOLY FUCK IT'S A FLASHBACK TO WHEN YOSSI GOT SLOSHED AFTER SHE THOUGHT MIKI WAS CHEATING ON HER/LEAVING HER FOR AYA BECAUSE SHE SAW THE TWO OF THEM KISSING WHICH LEAD HER TO DRINK HERSELF STUPID AND SHE WOKE UP THE NEXT DAY THINKING SHE BOFFED MAKI!!!
:OMG::OMG::OMG::OMG::OMG:

* JFC inhales deeply.



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"Where're we goin'?" she asked, as I propped her up against the wall.

"I'm attempting to make you slightly more coherent so I can go sleep my own buzz off," I sighed, leaning into the shower to turn it on. I held my hand under the water, waiting for it to get warm enough not to shock her system. "Ok..." I said, turning around.

My jaw dropped.

"Yossy, why are you getting naked?!" I exclaimed, unable to tear my eyes away from her lean, muscular form as she stripped down.

"Duh. Shower," she replied, looking at me like I was the crazy one.
Aaaaaaaah...so THAT's how it happened.



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A tiny voice in the back of my mind started yelling at me "Bad Maki! Very bad! Step away from the naked Yoshizawa," but I was too far gone to listen to it.
Annoying little buggers, aren't they?



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Suddenly, she looked very sad.

...

"Miki left me for Aya," she said quietly before I could even ask. My eyes widened. She looked away. "I just wish I could forget everything. Even just for a moment."

I can blame being drunk. I can blame the steam from the shower. I can blame the water coursing along her naked body. But, it was those words that did it. Her speaking aloud my thoughts from our last close moment together... from what should have been our first time together. Those words seeping into my alcohol-soaked brain. I thought it was a sign that this was meant to be. That this was my chance to fix my mistake from all those years ago.

So I kissed her.
She did whut?  :badluck:

Ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooh boy she's lucky Yossi was too hammered to clearly remember THAT.



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"I'm sorry. I shouldn't have done that," I said quietly. The running water filled the silence between us.

"No, I mean..." she said finally. "I just..."

"No, I know, it's ok, I'm - "

"It's not ok," she cut me off bitterly. "Nothing is ok right now. And as screwed up as it is, no matter what she's done, I still love Miki." She sighed and turned the water off.

"I know how that is," I muttered.

"What?" I lifted my head and looked her straight in the eye.

"I know how it is to be in love with someone no matter what has happened between the two of you." She didn't say anything. I sighed and stepped out of the shower.

"You don't mean..."
Sunnovabitch...point blank confession of unfinished raburabu.  For all her bravado and "genki-ness", it must really have been killing Maki to not be together with Yossi.
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I glanced down at the counter and spied my cell phone with the New Message light blinking. I sighed and dialed my voice mail as I walked back into the living room to grab some clothes out of the bag I'd packed for Korea.

"Maki!? It's Miki. I... It's a long story. But, just... I don't know... Please, if you see Yossy, send her home. I need to... It wasn't what she thought. It's all... Just, please send her home... Or at least... just... just tell her I love her." Click.

I hung up the phone and stared numbly into the darkness.

Oh my God.

What had I almost done...
Yikes, so the call was from Miki...

It's a good thing that Maki stopped herself when she did. She might have been drunk, but at least she still had enough sense to not give in like that.

...

Though, one can't help but wonder, even with the "playful" note that Maki left before she left the next morning, why didn't she leave Yossi an additional message that told her what Miki had said in her voicemail (i.e. that things weren't "as they appeared to be" and what not)?




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Who in their right mind would take advantage of someone like that?

Even if I was drunk, that's still no excuse...

What kind of person would almost...?

What kind of person have I become...
Damn, almost sounds like Maki's punishing herself for feeling temptation. She really shouldn't though, it wasn't exactly surprising, given the circumstances. And above all else, she didn't give in. She could have done it, but the important thing is that she DIDN'T do it.  She had an all-too-human reaction to a difficult situation, the fact that she was still in love with Yossi sure has hell didn't make things any easier for her.

Makes you wonder if this guilt is part of why Maki's not letting herself see (either consciously or unconsciously) that she could be happy with Aya, given how they've obviously gotten closer over the past while. Is she deliberately avoiding moving on and getting in a relationship with someone because she doesn't think she deserves that happiness?
« Last Edit: May 19, 2008, 10:53:35 PM by JFC »

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #327 on: May 19, 2008, 11:03:18 PM »
so...now we finally know what happened that night :w00t:

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #328 on: May 19, 2008, 11:10:38 PM »
Cool, I guessed it right. What do I win?
So we finally know what happened. I kinda feel bad for Maki, but it she and Aya gets paired up, then that will make up for everything, right?

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #329 on: May 22, 2008, 05:29:31 AM »
what's this?! updates from almond?!  :w00t:

Getting caught up..... MakixAya  :wub: :wub: they are so cute together! More please  :P

And Maki... :cry: You deserve to be happy...... with Aya   :yep:

*Anxiously waits for the next chapter

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #330 on: May 22, 2008, 11:50:30 PM »
oh, im so late, i wanted to post this earlier! something Ayaya must have seen...


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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #331 on: May 24, 2008, 04:58:32 AM »
*steps out of Lurkerdom for a second* I just wanted to say that I love your fics and think you're brilliant :mon inluv:...that is all... *steps back into the shadows*   :mon lurk:

...although, I'm trying to be less of a lurker and leave more comments...

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #332 on: July 08, 2008, 12:15:09 AM »
 Oh my gah! I need Maki/Aya!   :pleeease:
Please tell me you're still writing this amazing story?

I found Memoir today and once I started reading I couldn't stop. It is incredibly addictive and from now on, I am your humble servant.


Anyway, I just registered so, uhm.. hi everyone  :oops:


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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #333 on: July 08, 2008, 06:28:10 AM »
^ she might not be able to answer you anytime soon (She's currently relocating and hence has no internet) but I guess since I know the answer to your question... I should answer it :D.

Yes she is still writing

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #334 on: July 09, 2008, 03:13:23 AM »
Thanks PoPoe~! Yeah, I'm still somewhat alive. I just moved from Colorado to Maryland a few days ago. I'm on *shudder* dial-up and can only randomly get online. Plus I have to take care of my grandmother during her recovery from cataracts surgery AND I have to job hunt.... blah. XD

So, yes, very very sorry. I am alive, there are only a few more to go, but I've been too scatterbrained to write anything coherent for quite a while.

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #335 on: July 09, 2008, 03:26:08 AM »
^ Eh? What is this di...al...up that you speak off? :? :P

I gotta feel pretty sorry for YoMiki (mainly Miki) right now, I bet they didn't anticipated the bet lasting this long, but it means it will be even more special when you do get back to writing... Like having your favourite food that you have been deprived of for a long time and it's the best taste ever when you do finally eat it once more. Your writing is a sweet sweet candy to us all :heart:

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #336 on: July 09, 2008, 06:45:38 AM »
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Your writing is a sweet sweet candy to us all
Except for me.

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For me it's insanely addictive crack. ;D

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #337 on: July 09, 2008, 11:03:25 AM »
^ I'm glad I got off easy then... less withdrawals for candy than crack :P

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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #338 on: July 09, 2008, 02:43:32 PM »
I love it like a fat kid loves cake... in fact I am a fat kid, and I love it more than cake!
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Re: [part 31] memoir III: memory
« Reply #339 on: July 11, 2008, 06:03:20 PM »
Thank you so much for the quick answers!

I'm just happy to know this story is still going ^^

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