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Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen (Decisions)
« on: April 28, 2011, 06:09:54 PM »
This story, for what it's worth, is dedicated to ChrNo. You inspired so many with your vision, and all I can do is try to help it continue.
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Tsuukai!  Berryz Gakuen



Prologue

“You really are beautiful, you know,” the man said as he looked into her eyes. His suit was only slightly disheveled due to the late hour, reflecting a concern and care for how he looked which the girl preferred in a date. It wouldn’t do after all for her to be seen walking around with some grungy loser with smudges on his collar or maybe a wrinkled shirt.

“Ah, Mister, you know you shouldn’t say such things!” she teased while pointing at him and twirling her finger around in small circles.

“I apologize,” he said with a grimace. “Just couldn’t help myself.” He glanced down at their empty plates and his face fell a little. “I guess we’re done here then, huh?”

The girl checked the time on her cell phone, a small plastic Mickey dangling off a strap. “There’s another five minutes or so, if you’d like Mister. You know, that’s just about enough time for dessert…” She glanced up dreamily, a slight grin forming at the corners of her lips.

“Waiter!” the man called immediately, and rather eagerly, raising a hand toward the direction of the kitchen.

The cake was delicious.

Ten minutes later, the man and girl stood out in the night. He adjusted his hair, and despite his general suavity glanced nervously down at the girl, who calmly adjusted the jacket over her fully untucked seifuku shirt before settling the strap of her bag against her shoulder.

After a moment the man calmed slightly before fishing out a few bills from his wallet. Pondering a moment while glancing at her, he added another to those in his fist. The girl’s eyes shined back at him. “Well I have to say, you’re well worth the rate,” he said in an appraising tone.  “There’s a little extra in there for you, too.” And he handed the cash over to the girl, who counted it quickly with her eyes before making it disappear quickly into her jacket.

“You’re too kind, Mister,” she said in a warm voice. “It’s really you I have to thank for such an enjoyable night.”

She looked up into his eyes for a moment more, and could sense the wheels turning in his head. He was thinking about it – they all do – but the question was would he be brave enough to act? By now it was almost like a game to her.

“You have my number, right?” he asked, appearing even calmer now. “I would… like to see you again. The offer would be the same then too.” He considered her a second. “Maybe even a bit more.”

“Of course I do, Mister,” she said, flashing a broad smile at him.

“I-If I may I ask…” he began again, some of the nervousness suddenly returning and causing him to stutter. “May I… have one kiss?”

“Now Mister,” the girl said, grinning again and laying a finger lightly on his chest. The man stared down at it. “You know that’s against the rules. Although…” He looked eagerly back up to her. “You were very kind.” It truly wasn’t an ungenerous tip he’d given her – this one wasn’t too bad at all.

Standing on her tip-toes, she looked up into his face. He gulped, closed his eyes, and in a flash she pecked him lightly on the cheek. Not exactly where he was expecting, or perhaps hoping, but it would do. As she smiled and waved before turning away, she caught him raising a hand to his cheek.

“See ya, Mister,” she told him, and walked down the street. Yes, that would do. Such things were important for business after all – he’d now tell all his co-workers about Miyabi Natsuyaki, and somewhere in there a future client would surely be borne.

Lifting up her cell phone again, she cycled nimbly through her address book until she found the man’s number. Just as she had done many times before, when she pushed another button a confirmation popped up and she pressed yes to delete the number from her book, and once again to block it. Then she found another number and called it, humming to herself as she held the phone up to her ear.

“Chii?” she asked when the other end picked up. “Hey there!

“Yes, the date just finished. He actually gave me an extra five thousand!! I must be finally working my way into higher management,” she said with a giggle.

“Of course I won’t see him again. You know how I am with that. You should consider staying stricter to that too. I know how you get… Speaking of which, how about your night?

“No tip? The douchebag. At least he paid you in full. So whaddya think? Meet up in Shibuya after school tomorrow? Those boots at 109 have been calling my name since I saw them there the other day.

“Awesome! Well I’ll see you then, okay?”

And she clicked her phone shut, swapping it for a small wipe and tube of lipstick from her bag. After dabbing at her lips with the wipe, she gently donned a thin layer of the cherry. Sure she was going home now after the dinner “date”, but she had to look good all the time. Such was this small part of the life led by Miyabi Natsuyaki, second year high school student in the bountiful city of Tokyo.
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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #1 on: April 28, 2011, 06:39:21 PM »
Ara! Compensated dating. XD I was wondering when such a fic would show up in its proper form of usage. XD I'm not surprised that it comes from you. :P Considering that, well, it would have been me otherwise. :lol:

Very smooth of Miyabi here, and Chinami's in the business too? That's interesting. :D I wonder how the others will figure into this. XD

Can't wait to see more~

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #2 on: April 29, 2011, 02:37:49 AM »
i wonder... so miyabi and chii are some.. i dunno how you call it in english.
not completely prostitute... just someone fishing out men for a date in exchange of free food and money

that was a less mind-boggling start. i wonder how it'll progress...
i'll keep an eye here :)

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #3 on: April 29, 2011, 03:25:35 AM »
New fic! :cow: By the way, where's ChrNo? :roll:

What is Miya doing??  :shocked lol...There has to be GirlxGirl right? :D I hope she doesn't go any further than a kiss on the cheek(with the guys). ;)

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #4 on: April 29, 2011, 04:53:11 AM »
^ChrNo passed away. Hence the dedication.

Well, I'm interested to see where this is going, I had much the same response as Essy to the compensated dating bit. XD

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #5 on: April 29, 2011, 05:15:21 AM »
First fanfic that's not a MoMusu one to catch my attention~ and coming from you, it was only natural i was convinced :thumbsup

i'm really digging the plot already.  There's so many different scenarios that i can imagine from just the first chapter alone... but i wanna know what you have planed!  :D

can't wait for moar~~  :twothumbs

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #6 on: April 29, 2011, 06:44:10 AM »
Niiiceee. This is the second fanfic I've read. The first was a reposting of one of Jabronisaurs after he passed. Can't wait for more.
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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #7 on: April 29, 2011, 07:40:03 AM »
looking forward to this story, and love the illustration by ChrNo.

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #8 on: April 29, 2011, 03:34:54 PM »
i just got the chance to comment now..
It really has an intriguing plot... enjo kosai?
so miya and chinami is in it... hope we got to see the rest of Berryz soon...  :)

I didn't know what happened to ChrNo... she's such a talented artist, she'll be missed  :cry:

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #9 on: April 29, 2011, 11:37:34 PM »
Hello!! Not many comment replies to do since not much has happened yet, but I'll do them anyway! :D Next chapter should be much different...

Essy: You were waiting for a fic with this, huh? :lol: Well just so you know, it's only a part of the overall story. ;) Kind of a "characteristic", as it were. As for the other girls, you should find out soon! XD

aya-chii: Less mind-boggling? Not sure what you mean by that. :lol: I always like to have somewhat dramatic openings to my fics... See other comments for the talk on compensated dating and enjo kosai! :D

kano-chan: XD It has to be girl/girl, huh? Well, I have a feeling you still won't be disappointed... though guys will play a larger role here than in many of my fics it seems. O_O

rndm: Yay for other enjo kosai interest!! lol. Is that a good thing? o_O Anyway, lot more to come here!

SarangAi: Hey nice to see you reading. ^^ Hopefully I can drag you into Berryz with this!! I wonder if the coming chapter matches with even any of the scenarios you thought up? XD

Rick: Omg! I'm surprised to see you here!! But glad. :) Haven't met many fanfic readers in person. I know you're a Miyabi fan, so this should hopefully be right down your line. I hope you ENJOY! XD

muppet: Nice seeing you here too!! Please look forward to it. :)

eruchan: You caught the enjo kosai too :D You'll see much more soon!!


Next chapter was so much fun to write. XD I think I'm happier with it than I've been with an update in a long time. I hope you ENJOY too! Coming right up...!

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen: Chapter 1
« Reply #10 on: April 29, 2011, 11:51:03 PM »
Chapter 1: History & a Lesson


“Nacchan!” Miyabi heard coming from a voice that didn’t seem to exist. “Nacchan, wake up!!”

Miyabi murmured something unintelligible before realizing she was lying on something rather hard, and also in not the most comfortable position. In actuality, it was a position she was quite used to.

“Nacchan!” came the voice again, which she recognized to be Chinami’s.”Wake…!” But the girl cut off suddenly.

Groaning slightly, Miyabi sat up in her seat and stretched, smacking her lips a bit while brushing bright honey-colored threads of hair out of her face, her eyes blinking groggily at a form hovering above her. When it came into focus she finally recognized the features of Miki Fujimoto, her history sensei.

“Taking a nap are we, Miss Natsuyaki?” the woman said in a low, dangerous voice.

At first paying it no heed, Miyabi gazed blearily around to see her classmates all staring at her, some in amazement, some with condescending ‘I told you so’ looks, and others in fear of the impending confrontation.

“Only a little one,” Miyabi protested, finally looking up at her frowning sensei. She lifted her watch to check it. “Class has only been going on for like 20 minutes now, right? I haven’t had time for more.”

A hissing sound filled the room as many of the other students sucked in a collective breath.

“Well, Miss Sleepyhead,” sensei replied curtly, “Perhaps I won’t fail you for the day if you can tell me who the first of the great Ashikaga shoguns was?”

Miyabi stared blankly at the sensei before having her eyes caught by Chinami, who had glanced desperately in her book before looking up with bright eyes and mouthing syllables in her direction.

“Ta-ka…uji?” she eventually replied slowly, and not very convincingly.

Fujimoto-sensei stared at her a moment longer with arms folded beneath her breasts before spinning and heading back toward the front of the room. “Perhaps you won’t fail this day, Natsuyaki-chan,” she said sardonically. “However,” and she spun again upon reaching her desk, “Tokunaga-chan, you will.” Miyabi noticed her friend and cohort sink down into her chair. “It is cheating to give answers to other students.” An evil smile curled the sensei’s lips. “Somehow I doubt such a mark would hurt either of you more than you’ve already earned otherwise.”

Some of the other students stifled giggles at this, though at an all-encompassing glare from Miyabi most quieted. Except for a few boys in the corner, who didn’t even try to hide their laughter as they slapped each other on the shoulder playfully. Takeuchi and his so-called “gang” were perhaps the most annoying boys in the school, but the only harm they ever really did was try to look up some of the girls’ skirts.

However, they never touched Miyabi. She smoothed her long skirts as she tried to sit up more alertly in the chair. That was one of the reasons she liked to keep them long.

She glanced over at Chinami, who was still sulking in her seat. “Thanks for that,” she told the tanned girl. “But you didn’t need to. I could have handled old bat Fujimoto and the principal both if it came to it.”

“It’s just her eyes…” Chinami said, shaking her head aghast. “I’m all about egging on the teachers, but Miya, Fujimoto-sensei’s scary.”

“Well you just have to be scarier then,” Miyabi replied, gazing out from beneath her eyelashes at the sensei who had continued on again with the lesson.

She saw one or two of those boys still looking back at her, so she shot them a glare. Eyes widened and jaws dropped before they collected themselves and turned quickly back toward the front. Miyabi smiled in satisfaction, though the mere fact of her having to deal with them made her shiver.

“Kimoi!” she thought in disgust.

After class the students burst into the hallway, Miyabi as usual in the lead with Chinami right beside her. She had just remembered in horror that their next period was gym, before an abnormally tall girl from their class strode casually up to them. Some of the students behind gasped, and whispering broke out, but Miyabi stared back at their classmate nonplussed.

“You shouldn’t harass Fujimoto-sensei like that,” the girl said in a deep, slightly raspy tone. Despite her size she wore the seifuku expertly, her hair smooth and black and tied back into a long ponytail. Her appearance caused the boys they passed to stare and drop their books, and even many of the girls fluttered in awe. “Or any sensei for that matter. It disrupts the harmony of the classroom.”

“Harmony?” Chinami asked, eyes widening for a different reason before she fell into giggling.

Miyabi smirked. “I daren’t think it’s possible to harass Fujimoto-sama,” she replied, the appellation trailing venom in its wake. “Nothing disrupts her harmony, that’s for sure.” Then she adopted a thoughtful look. “You know, there could be a fun experiment…”

“Why do you insist on always pushing and pushing and then pushing some more?” the tall girl asked, unfazed herself.

Miyabi raised an eyebrow toward her. “Why are you following us to the gym? Aren’t you exempt from physical education due to your involvement in… what sport was it now?”

“Basketball,” Chinami chimed in helpfully, a smile beaming once again from her face.

“Ah yeah, that’s right,” Miyabi agreed. “So easy to forget such things.”

The face of the tall girl, one Yurina Kumai who was not just any basketball player but star of the varsity team and perhaps even of the whole school, darkened with every word Miyabi spoke, but it was someone comparatively tiny and pig-tailed bursting through them with books held tightly in her arms who broke the tension.

Miyabi at first thought some primary school girl had lost her way and might be soon to meet a very unlucky demise, but a second glance identified her seifuku as the same black-and-white as theirs and she realized she had actually seen the girl before, somewhere…

“Senpai…?” Chinami asked, and it clicked for Miyabi just as the girl whirled around to face them, pigtails flying, to stand with feet apart as if about to go to battle and her arms around the books as if she was trying to strangle them. Oddly, Miyabi noticed two pinky fingers stuck out straight from each fist.

The girl’s face glanced shyly up to Kumai’s before crinkled eyes fixed themselves on Miyabi, stopping her in her tracks. “Teasing others can be tolerated,” the girl almost squeaked out, “but NEVER dishonor Kumai-chan like that!”

“It’s really all right...” Kumai said, now looking uncomfortable as she scratched below her ear. “She’s free to have her own opinions about the…”

“It’s just not right!!” the girl chirped again, and then glanced around as if terrified at what she’d just said before yelping and dashing off down the hall ahead of them.

The three remaining girls stared after, stunned, as students flowed awkwardly around them. Almost each one gave an odd glance in their direction, although they tried to be subtle. Miyabi was used to such though, so recognized the expressions easily.

“Um,” Kumai said. “Well then…”

Other members of the team with similar heights came up behind her, laughing and urging her on with them. They ignored the two delinquents still standing to the side.

As she shuffled away awkwardly now herself, Kumai glanced back at them. “I never answered your question, did I?” she called back. “We’re off to run on the track!” And then they were already halfway down the hall.

With the star attraction gone, Miyabi noticed a group of girls who had apparently just been standing there watching suddenly start moving and brush past them down the hall as well, many shooting her dagger-like glares despite her reputation. After they passed they fell into hushed, girly conversation, some of which Miyabi managed to catch.

“Who was that little girl who stood up to Natsuyaki-san? Was she from the middle school?”

“No! She’s actually in third year just like us. I remember seeing her in some of my classes, but never knew her name since I don’t know if I’ve hardly ever seen her talk…”

“Tsugunaga Momoko!”

“Really? I heard that her papa…”


The rest of the conversation died out down the hallway in the shuffle of students between classes, most of them heading to the gym since it was time for the day’s physical education period.

“Those girls were senpai?” Miyabi asked, trying to keep a sneer from her face. “If I ever turn out like that Chinako, please gut me and make it quick.”

“Roger, Sukeban,” her friend said cheerily, and Miyabi groaned at her.

“I told you not to call me that anymore…” she said, taking the girl’s arm to drag her down the hall. “We’re hardly a gang now, after all.”

“There’s more than one of us still,” Chinami said brightly. “So that’s good enough for me! Being just the two of us isn’t that bad, is it?”

“I guess we do hold our own pretty well,” Miyabi replied, pondering sullenly as they walked, or rather marched, down the hall. At least it wasn’t a difficult march since whenever they were about to trample someone, the wise student jumped quickly out of their way. “You know, I might wanna skip P.E. today.”

“We can’t,” Chinami pointed out. “One more time and we can’t attend festival, remember?”

“Why would that be a bad thing again?” Miyabi brooded. “Oh, never mind. You’re right again as usual.”

The other’s face brightened at the compliment.

After having a whole aisle to themselves in the locker room to change, the two girls trotted out in sweats to see a flurry of activity already begun in the expansive facility. The gym was one of the largest in the area and the pride of the school, encompassing a center sports court with bleachers around it surrounded on either side by smaller courts, some with the basketball hoops lowered and some with nets strung for badminton or other activities.

Other multipurpose space surrounded the course, and along the border of the entire room ran a track. Miyabi noticed Kumai already running there surrounded by her teammates, some others jogging closely but not too closely behind in order to likely “keep an eye” on the stars.

As usual Chinami made a bee-line straight for the badminton court, disrupting the first-year class that was already using it. None complained at her arrival though, most bowing spontaneously and awkwardly at the well-known delinquent. Only one girl with full raven hair stood apart from the rest; she didn’t argue Chinami’s arrival either, but unlike the others stared almost regally when she appeared.

Miyabi shrugged and began stretching herself, watching everyone around her carefully. Like always no one dared come up to her, but she did catch a few boys and girls from the other side of the court she stood at giving her some glances and talking softly to each other. Again, nothing out of the ordinary.

She trotted to the outskirts of the grouping of students when her class – #3, 2nd year – was called over by Ishikawa-sensei, who today had decked herself out in gray sweats with pink edging. After doing roll-call, during which Miyabi nodded her name and the teacher glanced over at the badminton court upon calling Chinami’s, she informed them in that cutesy voice that the class activity today would be basketball.

Sighing in disappointment at an activity she did not want to do, especially with what happened along the way, without hesitation Miyabi walked away. She thought that maybe she’d hit the weight room again, and although that was on the other side of the building decided there was nothing better to do.

Along the way she passed by a few girls working on gymnastic equipment, each wearing tight tees and shorts, and Miyabi almost chuckled. You’d certainly never catch her alive in “clothing” like that. However, she found herself staring at the girls’ bodies as she adjusted her own baggy shirt and pants. There was something beautiful about their forms and the way they moved…

After a moment she realized that the girls, though pleasingly exerting themselves, were actually training only half-heartedly. They kept casting glances over to the mat spread out beside the equipment, and Miyabi continued walking until she got a better view of what they were looking at.

A single girl, rather small but stunning with dark brown hair tied back in a knot, twisted and occasionally tumbled in what Miyabi recognized from some corner of her mind as a floor routine. Her movements were graceful, and light reflected off a thin sheen of sweat that covered her body – most of it exposed since she also wore the tight tee and thigh-baring gym shorts. She also had the most perfect, rounded face with matted bangs falling just to her eyes…

After a moment, Miyabi realized she was actually blushing while staring at the girl, and snapped back straight again. She glared around her to make sure nobody saw, but the only ones close enough were the gymnasts. They were certainly focused on someone, but it was not her.

Refusing to look at the mat again, and now furious with herself, she stalked down a hall the short distance to the weight room and lay back on the bench. When she started the stimulating exertion of pumping iron, any such crazy thoughts from the gym left her head in her rhythm of movement.

After a moment she saw a group of boys draw nearby, but she continued on with the deep breathing and lifting as they talked quietly among themselves while darting glances her way. She thought she recognized them as from her year, though these were far from as annoying as the ones she’d had to glare at earlier in Fujimoto-sama’s classroom. A few of them might even be called cute.

As she knew they would, eventually one – the cutest even – broke apart from his peers and strode up to the side of her bench, his eyes on her the whole time. She pretended to ignore him, her eyes fixed on the ceiling as she drew labored breaths.

“Excuse me,” the boy said. “Miyabi-chan?”

Deciding to humor him, she lifted the barbell one last time before letting her hands guide it back to its rack. The boy even helped her as a spotter would, which almost made her chuckle.

“Yes?” she asked in a skeptical voice. “Um… Sakai-kun, right? What is it?”

A bit of nervousness seemed to strike the boy again, but he recovered quickly, his friends urging him on from a few steps away.

“I was just wondering…” he said, still politely, “Um, would you like to, you see, maybe hang out after school some day?”

Miyabi blinked. “With you?” she asked in disbelief.

“Yes,” he said, face equally blanked that the issue needed any clarification.

Miyabi stared at him a moment before suddenly bursting out laughing, and she sat up, taking a towel to wipe at her face.

The boy had frozen, still staring at her, and Miyabi saw redness coming into his cheeks. Surprisingly, she didn’t think it was from embarrassment. Maybe this Sakai was tougher than he looked. “You’re serious?” she asked, her laughter now having fallen into hoarse giggling.

“Yes I am!” he responded, and she could definitely sense the anger in his voice. “You think you’re so tough, so unlike a normal girl, that even though you’re beautiful you’re maybe going to end up old and alone, and someday miss what you could have easily had!!!”

Miyabi peered up at him, impressed at his tirade, and stood to look him in the eye. He was so close to the bench that it made him step back awkwardly, breaking the force of his attitude a bit.

“And what do you think I could have?” she asked quietly. “You?”

“Maybe,” he said, some of the anger fading now with the teenage hormones acting on him at her proximity. He glanced back at one of his friends, who nodded firmly. “Well since you like things tough I’ll give you a challenge,” he said, raising his chin in an attempt at pride.

Ah… Miyabi thought. Now they were getting to the heart of it. The boys obviously knew there was no hope in his initial proposal, so this had been the real plan all along. She couldn’t help but be a bit curious now what the boy had to say. If there was something that always piqued her interest, it was the idea of a challenge.

“So what challenge do you propose, then?” she asked amusedly.

He tilted his head toward the door. “There are boxing gloves and helmets in the equipment room next door. I hear you like to fight. How ‘bout we go out there and you show me what you got?”

This was becoming more amusing by the second. “What I got, huh?” she asked. “And what’s in it for me?”

“Reputation, I guess,” he said with a shrug. “That’s what you go for, isn’t it? Knocking a guy out in front of half the school would certainly improve your sukeban image.”

Miyabi’s amusement faded at what she thought the idiot might be implying, as if her image needed improvement. It wasn’t really a secret that her gang had been weakened yet again with Ishimura transferring to study abroad halfway through the school year. She had certainly not weakened though, and this boy seemed determined to learn that for himself.

“I can’t say it would suck,” she said offhandedly.

“But that won’t happen,” he said confidently, and she raised an eyebrow again. “And when it doesn’t, my reward will be that you go out on a date with me.” When the tips of her mouth curled as if to laugh out again, he continued quickly, “How ‘bout it? You accept the challenge or not?”

Stifling the laugh, she let her mouth fall into a wicked grin. Maybe she’d use a different tactic this time. She took a breath, and then gave an attempt at a sweet smile. “Always,” she replied calmly, and brushed past him toward the door. While passing his friends she winked at them, cracking up inside. “Oh,” she said when approaching the door as if just remembering something, and glanced back. “By the way, I don’t wear helmets.”

And she strode out of the room, beaming almost as widely as Chinami ever could.

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen (History & a Lesson)
« Reply #11 on: April 30, 2011, 12:34:02 AM »
Oooh! Miki, my second girl! :w00t: lol...Who can mess with her? It's weird to have Miya going against Miki. :lol:

Miya is such a cool character. :wub: I wonder who that girl was... A rather small girl? I'm guessing it's Captain. :roll:

Hope Miya won't get hurt since she's so tough. :)

Getting more interesting~ :twothumbs I'll be looking forward to your next update. :thumbsup

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen (History & a Lesson)
« Reply #12 on: April 30, 2011, 02:09:45 AM »
Who is the school's boxing coach?  Nakazawa-sensei?

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« Reply #13 on: April 30, 2011, 02:42:37 AM »
It wasn’t really a secret that her gang had been weakened yet again with Ishimura transferring to study abroad halfway through the school year. nice reference to Maiha! :)  Miyabi vs Mikitty- strong match!  :pimp:
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« Reply #14 on: April 30, 2011, 04:16:48 AM »
I'm more amused by the fact that tiny Momo stood up for giant Yurina against the legendary sukeban Miyabi. XD

Oh and I see you did take my suggestion of Rika as PE teacher. :lol:

Also Miki-sensei vs Miya the deliquent = WIN. Though, automatic win for sensei this round. XD

I look forward to more of this! :D

P.S. That boy is gonna get his ass whupped. And the small girl is so Saki. XD And I notice how Miya is in denial over her attraction to girls? :D

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen
« Reply #15 on: April 30, 2011, 05:13:37 AM »
Momo! and she's standing up for Kumaicho? somehow it's weird to imagine  :lol:
Looks like Chinami knows her...

A single girl, rather small but stunning with dark brown hair tied back in a knot, twisted and occasionally tumbled in what Miyabi recognized from some corner of her mind as a floor routine. Her movements were graceful, and light reflected off a thin sheen of sweat that covered her body – most of it exposed since she also wore the tight tee and thigh-baring gym shorts. She also had the most perfect, rounded face with matted bangs falling just to her eyes…
Captain? yep, it's her... and Nacchan is in denial  :lol:


“Yes I am!” he responded, and she could definitely sense the anger in his voice. “You think you’re so tough, so unlike a normal girl, that even though you’re beautiful you’re maybe going to end up old and alone, and someday miss what you could have easily had!!!”
Brave guy... But looks like Miya is planning something that won't be pleasant for the guy... looking forward to this  :lol:

Something has been nagging me about what's so familiar with the setting and relation between the girls...
and I realized it's similar to Berikou Fest VTR  :lol:

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen (History & a Lesson)
« Reply #16 on: April 30, 2011, 06:32:41 AM »
So Miya and Chii as badass gangsters yo. And Fujimoto as the badass history teacher. At least it's not geometry XD

I'm replying on my iPod so it may not be the best and definitely no mass quoting, so I'll have to come back and fix it later. Maybe :lol:

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen (History & a Lesson)
« Reply #17 on: April 30, 2011, 07:32:49 PM »
I think I might have guessed why Sakai-kun made the challenge, but I'll wait to see how it plays out.

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen (History & a Lesson)
« Reply #18 on: May 03, 2011, 12:09:04 PM »
well what a start to this fic!!!

Miya and Chii copmensate date and are rebels in school (even going against Miki!!!)

seems as though for all her hard image Miya may have just fallen for on of the better, more respected and like members of the school.....

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Re: Tsuukai! Berryz Gakuen (History & a Lesson)
« Reply #19 on: May 03, 2011, 03:43:54 PM »
^ Hey I'm glad you just posted, cause it's time for comment replies!! :lol:

kano-chan: Yeah, Miya's not just the little kid from Sexy Otonajan anymore :lol: I wonder who that girl was :roll:

resop: Nah they can't afford a boxing coach. Just gym teachers. :lol: Also I have a feeling you're reading too much into the challenge, lol. Maybe. XD

muppet: Yes, I don't get to place Maiha into my stories often. :lol: Just a Mikitty cameo for now. :)

Essy: Yes, it seems quite out-of-character for Momo :lol: Not that you really know her in this fic yet... lol. Then again, perhaps the real life character would give a clue XD Yes yes. That was one suggestion I took :) A little more of her in the next chapter too! Even though I really don't think I know how to write her lol.

Sensei does win this round, though Miya doesn't care. :lol: You'll find out more about that later... Man, so many quick comments. Well, some things might start to get answered soon. :lol: I don't think this is going to be quite the "epic" a lot of my stories tend to be.

eruchan: I think it was hard for the girls there to imagine too. :lol:

All this Nacchan in denial business... :roll:

BeriKou Fes DVR? You mean the opening with them in school uniforms? Well yeah, it's set in a school here with all of them. XD They've done lots of school-themed stuff! :D Some of the inspiration is from some of that. For example, back in 2006's Nyoki Nyoki Champion concert the girls were in a basketball club and were waiting for this charming, tall who could dunk. And guess who appeared? :lol:

rndm: You think Miki could make history a more... interesting class? XD I actually am kinda basing her off a U.S. History teacher I had in high school. He was crazy...

Somehow I knew you wouldn't fix it later. :P You can make up for it next time!! Although I don't think there's as much "stuff" in this coming chapter. Chapter 1 was significant for introducing the girls, and this one is more... character development. :

oddball: Yes, Miya and Chii are warui gakusei and perhaps a bit yankii. :lol: Hopefully you'll see more of their yankiiness before too long...

And poor Miya. She's so confused. :lol:


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