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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 3/Sept 10]
« Reply #40 on: September 26, 2011, 07:25:27 AM »
*shanks Nanoha like a boss*

Yes. Just that ;D.
Like I’m the most calm... Like, it must definitely be because, Like when we enter, I’ll be hurrying. But Because Junjun is older, I can calm down? I don’t really know, Like I just absolutely want her there beside me. Whenever we go abroad, if Junjun is absolutely not beside me, I absolutely won’t go. Something like that. -- Tanaka Reina about Junjun.

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 4/Sept 25]
« Reply #41 on: October 02, 2011, 05:56:31 PM »
ah! He hit acchan again!!! :angry:

Takamina quickly! quickly!  :banghead:


ps. first time~ i'm here yoroshiku ne xD

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**Postpone:: Atsumina Birthday fic,, I'm really busy.. gomen ne..

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 4/Sept 25]
« Reply #42 on: October 02, 2011, 06:42:28 PM »
Moreeeee pleaaaaase !!!  :tntrm:

He kidnapped Acchan this son of bitch !!! I just want to... argh

update soon !!! or when you can

(but atsumina moment so sweet !! :k-wink:)

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 4/Sept 25]
« Reply #43 on: October 02, 2011, 07:13:13 PM »
Just keeps getting better and better ;)
keep it up please! :3

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 4/Sept 25]
« Reply #44 on: October 05, 2011, 12:40:01 AM »
ah your story is so angsty!!! >< it's keeping me on my toes! lol it's so good though! lol i can't stop reading ><
and you left us on a major cliff-hanger! Dx i hope takamina finds acchan and can save her >< and that nothing bad happens to her too...
seriously that guy is c-r-e-e-p-y. can't wait for more!! update soon please!

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #45 on: November 13, 2011, 08:52:55 AM »
blughise: LOLOL I'm so very sorry that it made you angry *pats* Hopefully this will cease it 8D Here's the update, sorry it wasn't ASAP, but...at least it is something ;)

Flean: I'm so sorry for the mood swings LOL man, a lot of people are ragin' over this 8D Not that I am surprised ;) Hopefully this will make you happy~

kahem: =O Please do!

Kid_Alpha: Hope this clears anything up ;) And maybe I'll make a little side story on the little KojiYuu couple in the futurexD

Tanchan: Thank you for such a long comment! :heart: I'm glad it made you happy but sorry that it made you rage at the end ;) I can try on the physically part, but the mentally part is kind of hard LOL Since the brain usually remembers bad experiences. Though, she could learn from it I guess.

I already promise a friend for a happy ending so I can tell you that will definitely happen.

This WAS based off Last Friends, just sorta the plot wise, but the characters are basically different. Well, mostly. Most people who've seen Last Friends would immediately see the difference between Michiru and Atsuko. Both though weak in their own way, one at least sees wrong in things. Michiru wants to be loves but doesn't know how to retrieve it rightly or who truly loves her rightly, Atsuko wants love but can see who is truly giving it to her. I could go that way, ending wise, but that would be too cruel...and I can't make my oshimen go through the pain of seeing Atsuko go though that all ;___;/ I'm not that heartless 8D

You will find out what the title stands for next chapter ;)

arisa03: *is shaken, from a boss* BD

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chibi-nyao-chan: Everyone seems to want to...8D Here's more! ;)

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Mad World


All around me are familiar faces
Worn our places, worn out faces
Bright and early for the daily races
Going nowhere, going nowhere

I looked down at the person resting her head on my lap and I smiled tenderly, combing her hair with my fingers. We’d all been up all night, worrying, waiting. She has especially been worrying, staying by Takamina’s side hoping she’d wake up soon. People may think she is a little immature, but they’ve never spent enough time to know that, in times, she can be more serious than anyone I’ve even known. She is such a caring person.

My hand stopped combing her hair as I heard footsteps coming this way. I looked up just in time as Shinoda Mariko walked into the room, no emotion on her face. I was about to open my mouth but she beat me to it.

“I already called the police and they are on their way. We just need Takamina to wake up to see if she knows where he would take her.” We both looked over at the bed where the unconscious Takahashi Minami was in. She was mumbling in her sleep, reaching her hand out to the person she wished was here.

I looked away, shutting my eyes close, not being able to stand watching her like this. 

“Do you… Do you think she’s okay?” I looked down. Yuko’s eyes were trained on Takamina’s, her hand tightening around my own.

“Yuu-chan, you shou-” Her eyes landed on mine. Tears swelled up and I moved my hand from her head to her cheek, wiping any that leaked out.

“I can’t sleep Nyan-nyan, not when my friends are hurting.”  The pain in her voice hit me hard.

Silence hit us and we all let it stay like that. Mariko sat in a chair by the corner by the bed, crossing her legs and staring at the person we were all worried about. We all waited, hoping that she would wake up soon. She was the only one that might know where the ace was, might know where he could have taken her.

We were all worried and most of us wouldn’t admit it out loud, but we were all thinking of forcing her to wake up. In the end though, we all knew it was a bad idea. Takamina was already in a weak state; if we woke her up now, she’d be confused and devastated. None of us, of course, mentioned that option.

Movement on the bed caused my thoughts to drift and my gaze snapped up to the troubled girl. She let out a noise that sounded like she was coughing and choking at the same time. The small girl that was resting on my lap a few seconds ago shot up from her seat and ran over to her, worry clearly written on her face. I got up just as fast and went to see what was wrong.

Yuko was trying to calm her, holding both her hands above her head. I looked closer, confused as to why she was restraining her. My eyes widened as I saw blood roll from her wrist down to her elbow. It wasn’t much, but it was still worrisome. She started to thrash her legs and I had to hold her down. My power alone was not enough, Mariko had to step in and help hold her down while Yuko tried desperately to calm her down.

She was mumbling out her girlfriend’s name over and over again, pain audibly heard in her voice. Tears were streaming down her cheeks and her voice grew louder and louder, shriller and shriller. I could hear footsteps coming up the stairs and the door bursting open to reveal friends worried about her, wanting to know what was going on. Time seemed to freeze as I watched my friend cry out, my girlfriend trying desperately to calm her, to do anything to make her feel better. Words echoed in my ears as I remembered Yuko reassuring me about the captain and ace’s situation.

“Think about it like this, Nyan-nyan: Their heart is like a time bomb, ready to explode. One of these days, their heart might just break and they will spill out to us.”

I could feel my eyes glaze over for a second as I processed the memory reforming in my brain. I let go of her legs, reassured that Mariko was strong enough to hold her down. I moved to her head, taking Takamina’s hands away from Yuko’s, blood coming from her hand down to mine. Yuko stared at me, confused. She looked like she was about to say something but the look I gave her made her stop. She now looked at me with a new curious awe.

“Our challenge of course, is to stop the bomb, and help collect and piece together every single piece of their heart that’s gone missing.”

One heartbeat at a time, I told myself. I looked at Yuko for a second and then back to the crying girl in front of me.  My heart stopped beating as I leaned down.

“Do you think you can do that, Nyan-nyan?”

“Yes,” I said to myself mentally as my lips pressed against Takamina’s.

Their tears are filling up their glasses
No expression, no expression
Hide my head I wanna drown my sorrow
No tomorrow, no tomorrow


Maeda Atsuko’s POV

I cracked open my right eye, the only eye I could open. I didn’t shiver this time as I saw him watching me again with that sick smile that always seemed to be plastered on his face. He reached a hand forward and pulled a piece of my hair behind my ear. I winced away from his touch. Anger flashed in his eyes and his hand twitched. He sighed inwardly.

“I’m doing this for your own good, Atsuko-chan.” His voice sounded like poison to my ears. “If only you’d stop forcing yourself away from me, then I’d stop…” He caressed my cheek. Pain surged though my cheek from the bruises. I shut my eyes tightly. “… Hurting your beautiful face.”

I didn’t say anything, hoping he’d leave it like that and walk away. Like always, he did not. He just sat across from me and watched me, like a mother watching over her child. Silence hit the room; the only sound was my heavy breathing and his twirling pen moving on his fingertips. I looked at anywhere but his eyes, my thoughts shifting to nothing and everything. My senses were on alert, everything making me jump or think.

The crack in the wall made me think of the time when I fell off my chair and it fell backwards, hitting the wall and leaving a scratch. An empty can of soda made me remember when I was sharing one with Takamina and I managed to spill it all over her white shirt. She had to change into one of my shirts. The alarm clock on the bedside table made me remember the time when I woke up beside Minami, smiling at the small girl just before the alarm went off and her hand went up and smacked it away.  I had made her get up to turn it off.

A small, painful smile reached my lips.

My leg twitched up. I remember dancing together, showing me her fail tap dancing. The nail polish on my hand reminded me of when she painted them and I painted hers. I started humming, humming a song she used to sing to me when I would take naps on her lap, her fingers combing through my hair. As I hummed louder, more memories popped into my mind. My smile grew high and tears fell down my cheeks. I opened my mouth and looked up at the confused psycho-maniac in front of me.

I sang out.

And I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad
The dreams in which I’m dying are the best I’ve ever had


Takahashi Minami’s POV

I pushed myself against the wall, rubbing my lips and tears away in the process. My eyes widened as the girl who just kissed me looked at me, her face emotionless.  Her girlfriend looked at her, face red but otherwise speechless. The girl then turned to her girlfriend and kissed her full on the lips. She mumbled something softly to her yet again, leaving her girlfriend speechless.  She then turned back to me. I stiffened.

“Get a hold of yourself, Takamina. This is not like you, not like you at all. The only way to save the person you love is to get up and find her.” With that, she turned around and left the room. Yuko looked at me for a second and gave me a tiny smile before following Kojiharu.

There was an awkward silence as I slowly got up from the bed. My coworkers gave me looks, which my mind immediately took as pity, but as I looked closer, I saw that it was sympathy and sadness from seeing a friend hurt. My heart squeezed and I gave everyone a small smile. I went to the bedside table and took a pen out, writing an address on a piece of paper. I turned around and ran out of the room, ignoring the shouts of protest coming from my friends.

I followed the red string attached to my heart, knowing where it would take me.

I find it hard to tell you, I find it hard to take
When people run in circles it’s a very, very
Mad world, mad world


Maeda Atsuko POV

Once he finally left the room, I squirmed against the ropes but with no avail; it didn’t loosen. My wrist protested in pain, but I ignored it. The wound on the inside hurt much more than the wounds that showed on the outside. I choked on a sob as I heard footstep come this way. I squirmed more, ignoring every bit of pain that shot up my arms.

I slumped into the chair, defeated.

I closed my eyes and my senses heightened in my ears. Time seemed to freeze and each step that I heard felt like twenty minutes each. I kept my eyes closed as the door opened and the devil walked in, retaking his seat in front of me. He didn’t say a word; all I heard from him was his loud breathing. A hand touched my hair and my teeth grinded together, my hands tightening into painful fists.  When he spoke, shivers ran up my back.

“Acchan.” My eyes shot opened as far as they could go at the familiar nickname, but I just stared at the ground, not wanting to look into his sadistic eyes. “I had an epiphany while I left for those few moments. Would you like to hear it?” He took the silence as a yes.

“Well, you see, I thought it would be best that before never happened. I thought, ‘It would be better that way, wouldn’t it?’ The way I see it, those days we spent together were magical and nothing can take that away.” I saw the hands at his side ball into fists. “But… everything else can just disappear. Don’t you agree?” My mind tried to process what he was saying.

His fingers trailed down my swollen cheek and with a quick motion, he brought my chin up so my eyes would reach his. “Even if I have to do the job myself, Atsuko, I’ll make sure that you are only mine.” My thoughts only turned to one person.

I whipped my head to the side, away from his hold. I heard him growl slightly and before he could touch my face again, my teeth sank into his hand. He yelped and tried to pull his hand back, but I bit down harder, ignoring the new metallic tang entering my mouth. He screamed at me to let go and when that didn’t happen, he took my hair in his hand and pulled back. I opened my mouth, letting him go, and cried out.

He untied the ropes and pulled me up by my hair again, throwing me onto his bed. Blood flowed into my mouth as I bit my tongue. I cringed into the corner as he got closer, shivering uncontrollably. His black hair was a mess on his head, and with his bloodshot eyes, it matched perfectly well with any psychopath in movies.

“D- don’t… Don’t come n- near me...” I managed to croak out. His eyes just flashed in anger and he jumped on the bed. I clawed at him as he got closer, but he grabbed my wrists and jumped on top of me. He straddled my waist and pulled my hands above my head with one hand. I tried to push him off, but he wouldn’t budge. I was scared out of my mind.

He leaned forward. His eyes were teary. “Why won’t you let me be yours?” When I didn’t answer, his eyes became angry again. “If you won’t let me be yours, then I’ll just make you mine by force.”

My eyes widened as his lips were forcefully put upon mine.

Children waiting for the day they feel good
Happy birthday, happy birthday
And I feel the way that every child should
Sit and listen, sit and listen


The tears that were welled up in my eyes spilled and fell down my cheeks. His hands went to my shirt and he tore it open. When his lips finally left my mouth, I took a big gulp of air, panting. He took my lips again and forced his tongue into my mouth. My stomach stirred as his tongue touched my own. I felt violated beyond belief. I most importantly felt as if I would puke.

He pulled back again to breathe and his tongue trailed my cheek and down to my neck. I squirmed and screamed, crying for help.  His hand made its way to my stomach, stopping just above my waist line. He leaned up, his eyes blazing.

“I’ll show you a reason why you should be with me.” He leaned down to claim my lips again but was stopped as a bat came down on his head. He rolled off me, groaning and holding his head. An angel stood in front of the bed, holding the bat.

“Don’t you dare put your hands on my girlfriend.”

Went to school and I was very nervous
No one knew me, no one knew me
Hello teacher tell me, what’s my lesson?


“M- Minami…” More tears fell down my cheeks as she ran to my side and pulled me into a hug. I sobbed into her neck, repeating her name over and over again. I could feel my hair moisten as she cried too, tightening her hold on me as if I would disappear any second. I was just about to tell her I loved her when movement to the side stopped me. I had just enough time to move my head to the side and see as my kidnapper jumped at us.

The weight unbalanced us and we all were thrown onto the floor. I was pushed to the side by Minami to avoid a punch. She wasn’t as lucky, however. She was smacked in the face, her head whipping to the side. I screamed her name and pushed the man to the side, away from her. He looked back at me and raised his fist. I stared wide eyed as his fist came closer to me. I closed my eyes and awaited the immense pain that would come.

The pain never came.

Look right through me, look right through me

When I opened my eyes, the first thing I saw was Minami’s face. She smiled at me through the pain, her back blocking him from me and most importantly, from the punch itself.  He looked at her, surprised, and moved his fist up and away from her back. He raised his hand to hit her again, but she was faster. She turned around and pushed him down. She gave him a good punch to the face but with little power to the punch, he wasn’t affected by it. He merely pushed her to the side. Minami growled softly and raised her fist again. She did what no woman would have the courage to do: she punched him in the balls.

As he tumbled to the side, holding his jewels, Minami took my hand and led me out the door and then out the house. We ran as fast as we could go, ignoring the pain and, for me, ignoring the stares that were given from my shirt being torn and open. If the situation was any different, I would be embarrassed beyond belief and covering myself. There was no time to be weak at the moment though.  We could hear him behind us, yelling at us to stop. To any outside viewer, it just looked like a worried man chasing after two girls.

We both knew that wasn’t true though.

I didn’t know where we were going but we never stopped, not even to try and hide. We entered a park then and, being late at night, only a few bystanders were nearby. We stopped for a second to look where to go next.

 We were just about to run again, when we were tackled to the ground.  Again.

And I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad
The dreams in which I’m dying are the best I’ve ever had


We were all on the ground, trying to get on our feet. I looked frantically for Minami, getting up in the process. What I saw made me stop in my tracks. She was on her knees, her back to him, looking at me with a pleading look. He was standing over her, a gun pressed against her skull. His hand was shaking as he moved to cock it. His eyes never left mine.

Her life was on the line because of me.

I was at fault, again.

“This wouldn’t have happened if you chose me in the first place, you know,” he started, his voice shaking like his hand. “This–” he pointed the gun at her again. “–Bitch took you from me. I should just kill her now for ruining everything!” 

“P- please.” I raised my hands up and took a step forward. “Don’t!”

He snorted and pushed Minami so she was on all fours. Minami’s eyes were still trained on me. “Why? She should just die! Give me one good reason why I shouldn’t put a bullet in her skull right now!” My mind was racing and I put my hands down. I looked into Minami’s eyes and smiled softly at her. Her eyes widened as if she knew what I decided.

She always did seem to know what I was thinking before I knew it myself. 

I removed my eyes from hers and trained them on his, ignoring the silent pleads from Minami. I ignored every silent “run” she was sending at me.

“Because, if you shoot her, I won’t go with you,” I told him, determined. He stared at me for a minute, thinking.

“So, if I don’t shoot her, you’d come with me?” I gulped and nodded. He smiled widely at me, his emotions changing once again. “Really? You’ll come and live with me, Atsuko-chan?” I nodded again and he nodded with me. He then kicked Minami in the side and started to walk towards me. I tried not to call out to her by biting on my lip till it bled.

The blood seemed to ease me.

When he got to me, he grabbed my good wrist and dragged me to the streets. I could tell from his grip that he was afraid that I would run away any second. I kept my face to the ground, afraid he’d see the new tears leaving my face. I could see his other hand in his jacket pocket, hiding the gun. It was like a warning sign that said, “Run away, and I’ll shoot.”

Was this really how it’d end? How long would I be able to please him? Any second now, he could change his mind and shoot me. Or worse, he could shoot me and then Minami. I shut my eyes tightly at the realization. Either way, I’d probably die. This man was like a walking time bomb; any second, he could go berserk and go on a firing frenzy.

Who knows how many people would die.

I opened my eyes and smiled at nothing. I couldn’t let that happen. I couldn’t let him run loose and drag people under his feet. My gaze turned to his hand in his pocket. The perfect opportunity came just seconds after.

A man bumped into us then, and he staggered back. I squirmed from his hold and reached for the gun. I managed to pull it out, but he grabbed my hand. I dropped it and it skid into the street. We both stared at each other for a second and then went after it. He grabbed my hair and pulled back but I ignored it and kicked behind me.  I heard him cuss when my foot connected with his leg and he loosened his hold on my hair. He fell forward and we both went sprawling into the street.

My fingertips were just able to touch the gun when I saw light ahead of me. I was pushed out of the way, my head hitting the concrete when I tripped and fell. My eyes barely opened as I looked in front of me, my vision clouding. My sight was opposite from the street.

I find it hard to tell you, I find it hard to take
When people run in circles it’s a very, very
Mad world, mad world, enlarging your world

 
The last thing I heard was a screeching sound and a horrifying crash.

Mad world.


To be continued...



Okay, to clear anything up:

1. Takamina was not the one who got hit by the car.

2. Takamina was not the one who pushed Atsuko out of the way.

and,

3. I will not tell you if the bad man was killed or not 8D You must wait till next chapter.

Speaking of next chapter. The next chapter will be the LAST chapter. It took a while, but finally we are reaching an end to this angsty story~ Next chapter will have the answers you are all waiting for~ Including why I named it Meteor Shower xD As you can see, Last Friends fans, that I made Takamina stop the horrible act that killed us all in the dorama. I just did not have the heart to be so cruel! Besides, I'm pretty sure I'd get killed in my sleep if I did ;)

Anyways, I would like to thank Anon for PR'ing this and being very very very patient with this :heart: even though deep down, I know you wanted to hold me at gun point and make me finish this chapter. You are awesome :heart:

Comments are appreciated, tell me what you think. Even if it's rage comments :heart:

Have a great day ;)


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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #46 on: November 13, 2011, 09:20:56 AM »
On phone now... I'll edit later... LOL

edit :

I was really happy that you updated!!!!  :gmon heartu:   Weeee~~~  :gmon twirl:

But.. you made me cried in this chapter..  :pleeease: I read it on my phone while in the train.. And I cried!!  :mon waterworks:  Everyone was looking at me.. LOL...  :on lol:

At the ending.. I was like erk!!  :grr:  What happened!!! That idiot save Acchan!!!  :shock:

Can't wait for the last chapter!!!  :panic: :panic: :panic:  Please update soon~~~~  :kneelbow:
« Last Edit: November 13, 2011, 10:08:52 AM by Flean »

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #47 on: November 13, 2011, 11:31:51 AM »
oh no! my Acchan!!!!  :OMG: :fainted: how dare he hurts her!!!  :angry1:
I need to kill that bastard right now!!  :frustrated: lemme lemme kill him!!  :on voodoo: :on blackhole:
huhuhu... I need next update  :mon wind: I want my AtsuMina be happy and together...  :mon whine:

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #48 on: November 13, 2011, 04:50:28 PM »
YAY FOR THE UPDATE!!!
It's alright though....I understand, everyone's busy with school and stuff...including me. I haven't updated my fic for weeks or maybe months now :P
though this chapter didn't really calm me down!!!

I'm still on rage!!!

how dare that scumbag to try and rape Atsuko!!! though it's a good thing Takamina made it on time!!! but what happen to the others, how can they let Takamina go alone to save atsuko!!! where are the damn police!!!
Really...that piece of crap...to even threaten Atsuko to kill Takamina if she didn't go with him!!! :angry: :angry: :angry:

I just really hope that the person got hit by the car is him!!! He don't deserve an easily way out to this!!! but as long as he wouldnt be able to harm Atsuko then I'm good with it!

Update when you can :)

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #49 on: November 13, 2011, 05:00:03 PM »
I can't wait for the last chapter
please update soon
I'll say "I love you" to the person I love
Even if these feelings aren't returned, saying "I love you" to the person you love
That is the most beautiful thing in the world

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #50 on: November 14, 2011, 01:20:22 AM »
*shanks Nanoha like a boss part 2*
Like I’m the most calm... Like, it must definitely be because, Like when we enter, I’ll be hurrying. But Because Junjun is older, I can calm down? I don’t really know, Like I just absolutely want her there beside me. Whenever we go abroad, if Junjun is absolutely not beside me, I absolutely won’t go. Something like that. -- Tanaka Reina about Junjun.

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #51 on: November 14, 2011, 02:06:16 AM »
Kid_Alpha: Hope this clears anything up ;) And maybe I'll make a little side story on the little KojiYuu couple in the futurexD

Don't tease me, please?

Ugh that flippin' guy but good job Takamina for going to save Acchan.

Waiting on that last chapter~

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #52 on: November 16, 2011, 01:08:45 PM »
Hrrm could be that the Psychopath pushed Atsuko away from the car...waaa!

Mad world....


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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #53 on: November 17, 2011, 08:27:31 AM »
I wanna kill him more!!! He almost did it to Acchan!!! Arghhhhhhhh!!!!

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Re: Meteor Shower (AtsuMina) [Part 5/Nov. 12]
« Reply #54 on: November 19, 2011, 09:48:01 AM »
Holy God I was almost grabbing my heart when reading that part but luckily you made Takamina come in time to save Acchan.
I'm guessing the one who took the hit for Acchan is that bastard. Well I do think he loves Acchan but in a very possessive and selfish way but when it comes to life-and-death situation he would save Acchan even by risking his life? Or may be he's realized that he's wrong all along at the last minute?

I'm waiting for the next chapter :wub: and keep your promise on not making a cruel ending or else :angry:

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Re: [Finished] Meteor Shower [Part 6/Jan. 29]
« Reply #55 on: January 29, 2012, 08:29:08 PM »
First and foremost, I would like to thank everyone, EVERYONE, for reading it till the end ;__;// I am glad to say that I finally finished the last chapter. I know it has been rough on the ones who don't particularly like angst, so I hope that this will make things better on you all!

Flean: LOL I'm so very sorry that happened, I hope this chapter makes up for the anger! :D :heart:

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Thank you for all the comments! Now let's go onto the story~:

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They kneeled on the ground and put their flowers on the grey marble, tears stinging their eyes. The man of the two wrapped his arms around the girl and pulled her closer, rubbing her back and mumbling soft words in her ears. She nodded to him and they both bowed respectfully to the grave.  Within a minute, they walked out of the cemetery.

I watched the seen silently, my hands tightening around my own dozen of flowers. My eyes looked down at the grave I was at. My eyes felt dry, no longer able to cry. It was yesterday this grave was set in, and yesterday was the day I was at home, crying everything away. My eyes were dried but it didn’t stop the feeling inside me that wanted to cry some more. The only thing stopping me was a picture in my mind.

I smiled sadly at the grave.

I put the flowers on the edge of the grave, bowed, and looked back at the name. This was the person who saved my life, this was the actual person who changed my life and made me see what was actually right. The sad thing is, there is a little part of me that wishes that we’d spent more time together.

So his last moments weren’t so painful.

A hand touched my shoulder and I turned around to face the person. A smile already touched my lips as I looked at her.   A soft breeze made its way to us and I watched in amazement at how beautiful she was. Her hair blew gently to the side, covering her face. She smiled softly at me, and with her other hand, she moved her hair out of her face. 

“Atsuko,” she said in a calming voice. “Are you okay?” I blinked for a second and looked back at the grave. A hand slithered into my own and I squeezed it, reassuring her. I hummed a reply and looked back. I smiled at her. 

“I’m fine, now.”

I can finally see,
that you’re right there beside me.


You know, I’ve never thought of you as just a pretty face.

There are people out there that would judge you on how you look and frankly, I think that’s not the most beautiful part of the person. I mean, if you love a person, the looks don’t truly matter. I believe that the inside is what truly matters. That is one of the things I love most about you. Though, you being beautiful yourself is a plus.

Ever since I’ve met you, you’ve been trying your best to help people. You even help the people you don’t know. You helped me believe in myself when I had doubts about being a singer, a dancer, or being an actress. There were many times where I just wanted to quit, cry, and lock myself up in my room all day, but did I? No, I chose to believe in all your words of encouragement.

“I’m sorry it took so long to realize my feelings for you.”

I’m not sure what was going in your mind right then, but all I know is, you found my confession quite amusing. You let out a small laugh and looked at me, your eyes sparkling. The girl in my arms leaned up and gave me a small kiss on the chin, nuzzling it with her nose after.  A small blush reached my cheeks and I smiled shyly at her, not sure what to say. I waited patiently for her to answer.

“Atsuko.” I straitened myself slightly at the use of no nickname. The captain‘s eyes bored into mine, something in them stirring something in the pit of my stomach. I gulped loudly.

“Do you remember the hardships we faced when entering the idol world?” I nodded, telling her to go on. “We are two people who know what it is like to face new challenges every day without even a second glance. To people, they might think it’s easy, having our life, but in true reality, it’s the most difficult road to ever follow.

We both followed this path when we were young, hoping to strive for our dreams. Back then, I don’t think we knew what would come in the future. Each day we started brought new doubts to our minds, as if we were Atlas and the weight of the world was upon us. Each and every one of us changed slowly as the days went by. The only thing keeping us together were our only fans and each other. I remember the day when I first started realizing that I was falling for you.”

I am not my own,
 for I have been made new.


Minami’s POV

We exited the stage, our smiles still on our face from saying goodbye. When everyone was out of the view of the only people that showed up, their faces cracked and tears welled up in their eyes. I couldn’t help my own tears from slipping from my eyes. I turned away and quickly wiped them away. I shouldn’t be crying; there were more people that showed up today and it was something I should be very thankful for.

I went around the room, telling everyone that they did a good job, throwing hugs around to the people who seemed more upset than everyone else. When I was done, I sat down gulping the water I brought before the show. I watched as everyone started getting over today’s show and slowly dispersed, leaving for home. I stayed there till everyone was gone, my thoughts flying to the show again.

Before I knew it, it was already late.

I got up from my spot on the couch and started gathering my stuff. I stayed as long as I could, not wanting to go home and have my parents ask me how my day went (again).  Before I left, I decided to go for a stroll around the theater, maybe take the back out of this quiet place. I looked around the blank walls, my eyes locking in at everything and nothing. My ears pricked as I heard something move in the next room.

I walked slowly towards it, my feet dragging. As I got closer, my feet stopped, my stuff nearly falling out of my hands.

She was dancing and singing at the same time, her voice cracked in some places as the strain from doing both things got to her. When she messed up, she would silently curse and start over again. Sweat covered her face and her dark hair stuck to her face; she was panting hard. I watched in awe at how serious she looked while she trained. I didn’t realize how long I was staring at her until she dropped onto her fours, trying to catch her breath.

Before I could think about my decision, I dropped my stuff and ran to her side. I pulled her up and made her sit down and lean against the mirrors. I then ran back to my things, grabbed my water bottle and ran back to her side. I sat down next to her, handing her the bottle.

She took the bottle from me and chugged it, water dripping down her chin.  I watched in fascination as she slowly regained her steps. When she was done, she leaned her head against the mirror and closed her eyes.

“Are you okay?” I asked her, tilting my head even though she couldn’t see me. She opened her eyes and looked at me, her eyes boring into mine. A small smile crept on her lips.

“I’m fine, Takahashi-san, thank you. I’m sorry for troubling you.” I blinked and nodded.

“I don’t mind at all, Maeda-san. We have to stick together and help each other out.” I smiled. She just nodded and looked forward. I watched as a drop of sweat ran down her exposed neck.

“Tell me something though, Maeda-san, what exactly are you doing here so late practicing?” I saw her stiffen slightly but she didn’t move; she just kept on looking forward.

“I could say the same thing to you too, Takahashi-san.” She then looked at me. There was something in her eyes that I could not detect.

“I was just thinking about our show,” I simply told her. Her eyebrows scrunched up, disappointed with my answer. “And you?” She looked down.

“I don’t think I’m good enough to be an idol.”

My hand tightened around my skirt. I didn’t say anything, knowing she still had more to say.

“I… I’m not idol material. I promised myself that I would… you know, work my hardest to become one… but…” She looked up at me, tears streaming down her face.

“I c- can’t sing, I can’t d- dance… I’m not even a social person! How am I supposed to be an idol if I can’t even do the simplest things an idol can do?”

My heart pounded in my chest and without thinking, my hand went up and cupped her cheek. I wiped the tears away; I could feel my own tears welling up.

“Is that why you were practicing now?” She nodded weakly. “I see…” I thought hard about that, thinking of the way to reassure her. I wasn’t much of a leader, never been able to help others in situations like this. I took a deep breath and forced myself to glare at her, making her flinch slightly.

“Takahashi-san…?”

“Takamina.” She blinked, tilting her head slightly.

“Call me Takamina, I don’t like being called in such a formal manner. Especially when it’s a friend calling me that.” I pulled her in a hug, my mouth just inches from her ear.

“Maeda-san.” She stiffened. “Remember why you are here. It wasn’t anyone’s decision to put you into AKB, it was yours. You’ve worked so hard so far; don’t let it all go to waste. Remember the reason AKB48 was made. We were chosen to be idols that everyone could meet. So they could have someone to look up to, to be able to have the same hobbies as us, to realize that we are just like anyone of them.”

I leaned back, smiling.

Maeda Atsuko looked at me, her eyes widening. More tears sprung into her eyes and she pulled me back into a hug, crying into my shoulder. I rubbed her back reassuringly, whispering to her that it was going to be okay and to be strong.

We stayed like that until she finally calmed down. She pulled back shyly, giving me a sheepish smile. I couldn’t help but realize how gorgeous her smile was. It brought a smile to my own lips.

“Atsuko, or Acchan.” She took my hand and gave me a cute pout. “I also don’t like formalities amongst close friends.” Close…

A couple months later, she told the whole world her heart’s feelings and I told my heart my feelings.

Please don’t let me go,
I desperately need you.


Atsuko’s POV

We walked hand in hand until we reached out destination. I tilted my head and looked around, frowning slightly. We were on the rooftop. A blanket was spread out in the middle, and a basket and a small portable fire pit sat next to it. I could hear the wood in the fire crack and sizzle from the doorway. I turned towards my partner,

“… Wow,” was all I could manage to say. She giggled at my response.

She led me to the blanket and we both sat down close to the fire so we wouldn’t get too cold. The weather was perfect: there was just a slight breeze in the night, but it was bearable, something cuddling couldn fix. The smell of the burning wood was the only thing I could truly smell but I managed to smell the hints of different food; the chocolate, though, was overwhelming.  My stomach growled, reminding me that I haven’t eaten since early this morning.

I reached my hand forward to look in the basket, but her hand slithered in my own. She smiled crookedly at me before letting go of my hand. She then reached into the basket, pulling out multiple contents. I watched her contently, my stomach growling louder as more food made its way onto the blanket.

It didn’t take long for me to realize that all the food she was pulling out were my favorites. Foods from fruit, cakes, drinks, sashimi, and even random ones like shellfish and cheese. It made me wonder how she had the time and day to gather up all the contents. The last thing she pulled out, which my nose praised when saw, was a small chocolate fondue fountain from behind the fire pit.

My arm laced around hers, pushing her closer to me. I rested my head on her shoulder and watched her prepare everything. When she was done taking the plates and utensils out, she turned to me with a sly grin. I couldn’t help but notice a hint of pink on her cheeks. I leaned forward and kissed her lips, smiling. When I pulled back, I saw her eyes sparkling.

 “Thank you,” I whispered to her. “For everything.”

I am not my own,
for I have been made new.


Before I could see her face, I buried my face in the crook of her neck, my face heating up. I felt her laugh softly and wrap her arms around my waist. I could feel her breath against my ear and I couldn’t help but shiver. I didn’t know if she thought I was cold or if she knew what she did to me, but she pulled me closer and rubbed my back.

We stayed like that until my stomach let out another hungry growl.

She pulled me back and handed me a plate, smiling ear to ear. “Come on, Acchan, eat up.” I complied and started piling food onto my plate. If I was a dog, I’m sure my tail would be wagging up a storm.

While we ate we made small talk, flirting and teasing each other when we could. Minami fed me cake and I tried to feed her cake but failed, dropping in on her shirt. I told her she could take it off if she wanted to, so she wouldn’t smudge it anymore of course, but then she thought I did it on purpose for that very reason. 

I pouted some more, my shoulder bumping against hers.

We were sitting next to the fire, our legs entwined and our smiles raised high. We both were roasting marshmallows over the fire, watching them closely so they wouldn’t burn too much. I watched as Minami’s marshmallow caught on fire and before she could pull it back, it sank down and fell into the flames. I snorted.

I pulled mine back and blew on it, still watching her pouting face mix up into different emotions. I took the gooey marshmallow off with my fingers and smiled crookedly.

“Takamina~” She turned towards me. “Say ah~~” She choked softly and her cheeks turned red. She looked down slightly and when she looked up, her mouth was open and her eyes closed. My heart hammered in my chest and it took all my power not to lean forward and kiss her.

I broke a piece of the marshmallow off and moved it towards her mouth. When she felt the texture against her lips, her eyes slowly opened and her lips moved over the treat until her lips were on the tip of my finger. She grabbed my hand in her own and pulled it closer. I could feel her tongue slithering around my finger until she had the whole marshmallow in her mouth. Her lips stayed on my finger longer than necessary before she moved back, eating the treat. I could see the satisfaction on her face before I looked away, covering my embarrassment.

An idea popped in my mind.

“Minami~” I was surprised at how confident I sounded. I grabbed a piece of heart-shaped chocolate and held it out. “You can’t have smores without chocolate~ Ah~” She blinked for a second before closing her eyes again.

Before I could lose my nerve, I bit one end of the chocolate and pressed my mouth against hers.

Her eyes shot open and I could feel her stiffen against me. Before I could get embarrassed and leave it at that, I closed my eyes and leaned closer. Soon, her body relaxed and her hands found their way around my waist. I pushed her down gently until her back was pressed against the ground. Finally, my tongue pushed the chocolate into her mouth.

She made a small noise in the back of her throat but didn’t stop, her hands grabbing a fistful of my skirt. Our tongues clashed with one another, both hooked on the taste of the chocolate going back and forth between our mouths. My hand clasped around her left hand and I brought it above her head, my fingers entwining around hers. I couldn’t get enough of the taste; my mind was in pure ecstasy.

I pushed myself against her until we were molded together.

Our tongues stayed clashing even when the chocolate vanished and the taste was left with only the sweet taste of each other. Her free hand slid under my shirt, her fingers tracing my spine. I shivered as she left a warm trail of lava behind. I was the first to pull back, trying to catch my breath. We both looked at each other, panting.

“O- okay… that was hot,” she started first. “We have to do that again later.” Even as she said those words, I saw her cheeks tint red. I could already feel the heat rushing to my face but I couldn’t help myself.

“Why later, why not right now?” I licked the side of her lips, licking the remains of our delicious treat we had not just minutes ago. I pressed my nose against hers. I could feel the heat radiating off her, it felt like she was hotter than the actual fire pit next to us. She squeezed my hand and nuzzled my nose.

“Later.” I pouted and leaned back. She gave me a cute smile. “If it was up to me, my dear, I would have done that much longer.” I blushed at her words. “However, the reason I took you here seems to have arrived.” I blinked. She pointed towards the sky.

I looked up, my heart leaping in my chest.

Please don’t let me go,
I desperately need you. 


Balls of light shot across the sky, disappearing as it made its way across the sky. They looked too far away but just the right amount of them seemed to light up the sky. I could see the lone stars behind them, winking every once in a while. Even though it was a little hard to see, I could still see them. I looked down, smiling brightly. Her eyes had a warm tint to them, a knowing smile on her lips.

“You once told me that you wanted to see the stars again. I found something better for you.” My eyes widened slightly from reminiscence. “Every day when I went home, I would check the internet, the news, anything for signs of a day that we might be able to see even one star. The other day I caught up on this: a meteor shower would come this night and the weather would be perfect. There was still a 50/50 chance that we wouldn’t be able to see it, but I couldn’t miss a chance like this. My heart knew that we would see them though. After all…” Her smile turned sly.  “I’ve seen one since the day we joined AKB48.” She turned to the basket and pulled something out.

“That’s why I brought this, to show you.” She turned the object around. The girl had shoulder length black hair, the ends curling slightly. Her brown eyes were wide, tears at the brim. She looked different: no more confusion was seen in her eyes, no more worry. She looked whole again, happy even. If I saw this reflection a couple months again, it would make me wonder how that person could ever be me.

A lone tear escaped my eye.

“You see, Atsuko.” I looked up from the mirror in time to see Minami’s hand cup my cheek. I leaned into it as she wiped the tear away with her thumb. “You are brighter than you think you are, shining your way into everyone’s life. Without your smiles and hard work with us, AKB would have disbanded a long time ago. You are the reason I worked so hard for today, for the future.  When I saw you that day, practicing till you collapsed, I knew I couldn’t give up. As the days went by and things got better, I knew for a fact that the reason I was able to stay in AKB48 and deal with all its hardships was because you were there right by my side.” She leaned her forehead against mine, a fond smile on her lips, her eyes sparkling.

“Meada Atsuko, you are my meteor shower.”

More tears escaped my eyes and I closed them, leaning forward to kiss her lips. She pulled me closer and leaned back. She then kissed my tears away. “I love you,” she whispered to me. My insides felt like goo, my cheeks slightly burning.

“I love you too, Minami.”

For the first time in a long time, I felt like I was whole. I felt like what a star must feel like when they are able to move a across the sky. For the first time, I didn’t have to look up at the sky to find what I needed.

All I had to do was look at the person right in front of me.

Meteor Shower

End.



Thank you again for reading this story, it means a lot to me ;___;/ That's to all you lurkers out there too who happened to have read this!

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Re: [Finished] Meteor Shower [Part 6/Jan. 29]
« Reply #56 on: January 29, 2012, 09:03:14 PM »
Yayy finally ending. Love their chemistry. They end up together as lovely dovey. ^^

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Re: [Finished] Meteor Shower [Part 6/Jan. 29]
« Reply #57 on: January 30, 2012, 12:53:19 AM »
Swap chocolate mouth-to-mouth with me, the usual kiss is boring~ :P

That was a nice ending, gives a little insight of the beginning, this was a short story but it was nice, may have been a long wait but it was worth it.
I'm holding you to that kojiyuu sidestory though...

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Re: [Finished] Meteor Shower [Part 6/Jan. 29]
« Reply #58 on: January 30, 2012, 07:46:33 AM »
aww so touching your fic thanx :D i like the final chapter

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Re: [Finished] Meteor Shower [Part 6/Jan. 29]
« Reply #59 on: January 30, 2012, 01:29:25 PM »
The ending was sooo...  :k-inlove: Good Job! :ptam-ok: Thank you for making such a beautiful Fics!  :on cny1:
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