Author Topic: Untitled fic (AtsuMina) - COMPLETED (Read 31599 times)

whiningwillow · « **Reply #40 on:** December 23, 2012, 01:04:56 PM »

Chapter 6

Yuko-san invited me to her Mom's party, I obliged since I need a breather from all these school works that has been keeping me busy from time to time. Besides, I know that she invited...Minami

When we're in middle school, We used to play in our houses. We usually play pretend; me, saving the princess from the dragon's lair. 'My princess! Prince Tomo will save you' that is my cool line. She will yell 'Help me! Help me Prince Tomo'. I feel so special to her during those times. But as we get older, we seldom see each other; is it because were getting much more mature? I tried talking to her once, but I felt so uneasy and I ran away.

"Do I like her already?" I asked myself millions of times. I tried removing that idea from my mind, but it keeps on popping and popping up. I guess I like her...no, I love her already.

Its 12:30PM when I arrive at the house of Yuko-san, I hope she's (Minami) still here.
"Yuko-san!"
"Tomomi! Come in, come in" she greeted me and she led me inside the house. I hand her the present I bought for her mom.
"Ano Yuko-san, did Minami came here already?" I asked. Yuko-san gave me a scary look.
"Minami left a while ago. That shorty, she'll pay for what she did" I wonder what Minami did, besides she's too good to do something bad or terrible.
"I'll be going Yuko-san.."

I burst out of the room without properly saying goodbye to Yuko-san. I hope that I can catch up to Minami. This time..this time I'll talk to her. Say to her what I feel. This feeling that I've been keeping for a long long time.

RUN! RUn! Run! run....run.......run......r...un.........my legs are starting to fail me, but there she is. I can see her from afar.

She's with someone..

I hid behind the post to conceal my presence. Then..

Tears started falling down from my eyes. Sadness filled my very being.

She..she kissed her. My heart sank as I watch, across the cold and humid street, Minami and the school's top student Maeda-San kissing.

sorry if its short guys

FNK23 · « **Reply #41 on:** December 23, 2012, 02:40:29 PM »

ahh poor tomoo

please make some takatomo again

i like atsumina most, but takatomo is cutee

miayaka · « **Reply #42 on:** December 23, 2012, 05:18:22 PM »

They're kissing!!!

Haruko · « **Reply #43 on:** December 23, 2012, 09:29:15 PM »

Quote from: miayaka on December 23, 2012, 05:18:22 PM

They're kissing!!!

yeah! i want a feel sorryfor tomochin.. but atsumina is kissing.. of course i dont feel sorry.. T_T Im a bad person

whiningwillow · « **Reply #44 on:** December 31, 2012, 06:22:45 AM »

Chapter 6.5

'I love you' she said. She runs around while I'm chasing her across the calm clearing. We were laughing, running, playing around in circles. We sat down to take a rest, she said 'close your eyes'. I closed my eyes without any hesitation. My mind is clear of any random thoughts, it's only her that's in it. I can feel her soft lips touching mine. I can feel the warmth of her love through that kiss. As I slowly opened my eyes, I see no Acchan, but Tomochin.

Nightmare again. My hands are shaking in fear. Cold sweat is sliding off the surface of my skin.
"What the hell is that all about?" I asked my self.
Acchan's arm suddenly pulled me back down to the bed. Her legs pinned mine.
"Go back to sleep Minami. I'm here." she whispered.

Chapter 7

It took me a while to process the situation. I..can't stop the tears from falling. I shriveled on the dark damp corner of the road. I held myself, thinking that it was all just a dream. But...no, everything is real. Minami....am I too late? I guess I'm too slow in realizing my true feelings.

It has been 4 days, I still can't blink my eye properly. I've been sulking on the corner of the room, curled up like a ball. My eyes hurt from too much crying. My classmates are always asking if I'm okay but I always answer with 'Ah yes, I'm so much fine. I've been watching too much dramas lately'. Yuko-san is very much concerned about me, she's always asking me to tell her everything, but I always say that I'm okay.

*beep beep*

-Nee, Tomomi. Do you want to go somewhere tomorrow? I think that we should have a breather from all the fuss in school. I'm inviting some friends. Please come, okay?-
Xoxo Yuko

-Sorry Yuko-san, I have to decline for now. Im not feeling okay lately, I think I need some rest for now. Thanks for inviting me by the way-
T0m0m0

-Ah I see. Please get well soon Tomomi. Don't stress yourself, okay? See you soon -
xoxo Yuko

-Have fun tomorrow Yuko-san Take care-
T0m0m0

*beep*

I'll tell her everything today. I just wanted to relay this goddamned feeling. I don't care if she'll reject me, I just want to let her know.

I trailed her as soon as she passed by the gate of the school. I couldn't bring myself to her, I'm just too scared. She went inside the 24/7 store 2 blocks away. I waited across the street, ahhhhhh! She's running!

RUN! RUN! my legs, please don't fail me now..
*THUD!*
Ouch..it's as I hit something. My head hurts and my butt too.
"Im so sorry. I wasn't looking..eh, Tomochin!?" a familiar voice. It's..it's Minami. My heart starts racing, it's beating too fast right now. Calm down Tomochin, calm down.
"No worries Minami, I wasn't looking either" I dusted my skirt off, trying to act cool and all "I'm sorry too"
What am I gonna do? Will I tell her right now? Waaaaaaaa!! How? When? What? My head is spinning.

"Im sorry for being so sudden, but can we walk together since we live next to each other. Do you have any other places to go to?" she asked.
"I don't have any other places to go. Is something wrong?"
"Uhmmm..nothing nothing. I just thought that we should have a small talk since we didn't talk to each other for a while" she's trembling, I can see it from her hands.

We walked together on our way home. Our houses are just few blocks away from each other. Everything feels awkward and I guess, she feels that way too. I kept my composure, keeping my self calm. I know I had to say it, I just need to time it right.
"Quite nostalgic isn't it? When were in grade school we used to walk together like this. I kinda miss the long walks we used to do.." what the hell did I just said?!!! My heart, please be calm.
"Haha... Me too"

We talked about everything on our way. It's feels like everything returned to normal. I need to say it...this time.

Soon, we arrived at the front of her apartment.
"Thank you so much Tomochin. I had fun" she walked inside the gate "Jaa matane~"
"Wait! Minami..."
"What is it Tomochin?"
"I...I like you..."

I ran towards her without thinking. Minami...Minami...

I wrapped my arms around her.

"Minami, I love you..."

I kissed her.

sorry for the long wait (thinking that there's anyone waiting for the update) OTL
I've been going everywhere ever since the vacation started. Oh well.. HAPPY NEW YEAR GUYS!

TakaminaBG · « **Reply #45 on:** December 31, 2012, 06:29:27 AM »

So that's how everything started.
Tomochin. Ganbatte!!!

Haruko · « **Reply #46 on:** December 31, 2012, 08:05:23 AM »

wow that was fast..

Wmatsui22 · « **Reply #47 on:** January 01, 2013, 06:49:45 AM »

-Hello.

-Nice chapter!

-Thank you for update

-Ganbatte

-WMatsui_22-

cisda83 · « **Reply #48 on:** January 04, 2013, 11:29:37 PM »

Thank you for the update...

I like how you make it Atsumina... with a bit of TakaTomo in between...

Can't wait for your next chapter.

whiningwillow · « **Reply #49 on:** January 11, 2013, 02:40:55 PM »

Chapter 8

"Christmas season is here Minami!!" Oshima-san cheerfully said while we're walking along the corridor "Do you have any plans?"
Plans plans plans..I dont have any to begin with, unless Acchan asks me out.
"I don't have any Oshima-san..I'd rather stay at home like I always do.."
"Hmmmmmmm..why don't you ask Maeda-san eh" she gave me that evil grin which is full of suspicion and evil "Are you two going out? Hahahahaha"
"Ehhhhhhhh?!!!!! No no no..I told you, she's just my tutor" what to do? What to do? Here I go again.
"Just kidding Minami. Ah there she is" she pointed towards Acchan, who's going to our direction "Maeda-saaaaan!!"

*school bell rings*

Whew, class' finally over, another boring day. I fixed my things and I noticed a piece of folded paper inside my desk.
"I wonder what this is.." I unfold the paper

-I just wanna talk Minami, fountain 4PM-
Tomochin

I've been avoiding her ever since that 'incident'. I'm afraid.. afraid of Acchan knowing what happened. What am I gonna do? Tears started falling down from my eyes, because of the numerous possibilities that could happen.

*beep beep*

-Can you wait for me until 4:30? I just need to do some errands for the treasurer. I love you-
<3 A <3

I started walking down to the fountain, that fateful place where Acchan and me started. My footsteps are uncertain, slow, dense, it's as if something bad would happen. I can feel it, this uneasiness and uncertainty is starting to kill me.

I can see her from afar, that brown curly hair dangling over the shoulders. My hands started trembling with the sight of her. I'm scared.
"Tomochin.." she turned to me. Her eyes were upon mine.
"Minami..I'm sorry" tears started falling down from her eyes. Without warning, her small frail body falls down to the ground.
"Tomochin! Tomochin..you're burning hot..we should get you to the doctor or the infirmary." what to do? What to do? Hold on Tomochin..
"I'm sorry Minami.."

I ended up bringing her to the hospital near the school, since the school's infirmary is closed. I looked at my watch, it's 5:30PM. I've been waiting for the room door to open so I could check up on Tomochin. I hope that she's okay.
A doctor came out of the room.
"Takahashi-san?" the doctor asked me
"Yes..is my friend okay?"
"She has been working her body up to the extent that her body gave up..'Over-fatigue' is the cause Ms. Takahashi" the doctor explained "She needs a lot of rest."

I rushed inside the room to check up on her. She's sleeping. I sat on the chair beside her bed, I held hand, feeling the warmth of hers.
"I'm sorry Tomochin.."
"I'm sorry too Minami.." she looked at me suddenly and gave me a faint smile "I should be the one apologizing.."
"Shhhhhh.." I put my finger over her lips "Don't worry about it Tomochin. Go rest, you need lots if it."
She smiled and went back to the world of slumber.

*beep beep*

-Is she okay already? I'm on my way there already. Do you want anything?-
<3 A <3

-The doctor said she needs lots of rest, a day or two will be enough. Please get me some apples on your way here. Take care-
TMina <3

It's 6:00Pm according to the clock hanging on the wall. It feels gloomy inside this hospital room, the lights are off, only the brightness of the moon gives light in this room. I suddenly remembered the days I spent with Tomochin. I cried.
"I should've treasured them.." I said to myself.

"Maeda-san isn't it?"
"I told you to sleep right" I was surprised that she's awake. And how did she know?

"It will be better if I just come to dislike you, Minami. I shouldn’t have come to know these feelings. I should've forget everything about you even I know that it will be painful, painful just to throw everything away. Why? Why did we became like this? When I close my eyes, I feel like you’ll be right here with me just like back then. I guess this is just one-sided..."

"What are you saying Tomochin? I don't understand.."

The door suddenly opened. It's Acchan..

"She's here, Minami.."

UPDATE AT LAST!! (~_")~ any expectations for the next chapter?

TakaminaBG · « **Reply #50 on:** January 11, 2013, 03:40:53 PM »

- What do you mean, Tomochin. I don't understand.
Does Minami really understand nothing?? I mean, come on, no one is that stupid.... right??
Ahhhhh!!! My TakaTomo!!!!!

stepk · « **Reply #51 on:** January 11, 2013, 07:43:00 PM »

I want atsumina

thanks for update

cisda83 · « **Reply #52 on:** January 11, 2013, 10:13:32 PM »

Ah... Tomochin... is sick... and very sad...

Minami is confuse... probably blaming herself.

Anyhow, nice update there... can't wait to see the next

Haruko · « **Reply #53 on:** January 12, 2013, 05:19:54 AM »

Quote from: TakaminaBG on January 11, 2013, 03:40:53 PM

- What do you mean, Tomochin. I don't understand.
Does Minami really understand nothing?? I mean, come on, no one is that stupid.... right??

but i prefer atsumina!!

korin48 · « **Reply #54 on:** January 12, 2013, 07:54:29 AM »

Takamina is really confused huh?
I wanna know what happen!!

Quote from: TakaminaBG on January 11, 2013, 03:40:53 PM

- What do you mean, Tomochin. I don't understand.
Does Minami really understand nothing?? I mean, come on, no one is that stupid.... right??
Ahhhhh!!! My TakaTomo!!!!!

Uhm... Are you the shipper of TakaTomo? I thought you shippered AtsuMina...?
Because of your Dp... >_>

whiningwillow · « **Reply #55 on:** January 18, 2013, 11:58:36 AM »

Chapter 9

I was staring blankly outside the dark gloomy sky. Everything seems so normal, nothing special, like my days in school. The three of us were looking blankly at the spaces, silence filled the room. No one dares to talk, no one even tries to bring up a conversation. My phone suddenly lit up, notifying me a mail..

*Beep beep*

-Nee Minami, can we go home already? Her parents are on the way and it's Friday..you know?-
<3 A <3

-Can we please just wait for her parents to arrive? We can't leave her alone right? Besides...she's my friend. We still have tomorrow Acchan-
TMina <3

-But, okay..nevermind-
A

I looked at Acchan, she looks angry. She suddenly stood up and walked towards the door.
"I'll just get something to drink."

"Hey.. Wa..wait!" I followed her outside the room. I grabbed her hand, but she resisted, she pulled her hand forcefully.

"Hey..what's wrong with you Acchan? Why are you acting like this?"

"And why are you acting like that HUH?! Looking all so caring and stuff."

"She's my friend Acchan!!! How can you be so cold?! What do you want me to do?! Leave her dying in school? Leave her alone here in the hospital?! What is the matter with you?"

"We talked about this right? Friday is our day, OUR DAY! then all you gonna do is to spend this day with your friend? IM YOUR GIRLFRIEND! YOUR GIRLFRIEND MINAMI!"

In seconds, without thinking, my hands slapped her face. Tears started falling down.

"You.. You're horrible.."

I ran back to the room, but she pulled my hand.

"Wait Minami..I'm so...."

"All you think about is yourself! YOU AND ONLY YOURSELF Tell me, do you really care about me? You're horrible..and selfish..."
"Is this what you want? Fine..I'm breaking up with you Minami.."

Time stopped upon hearing those words. Everything around feels so heavy. This vast space is narrowing down on me. I can't breath, I can't utter any word. Why does it have to be like this? I'm frozen on this place where I'm standing. Its ending..ending......end...

She ran towards the opposite direction, her skirt is fluttering aimlessly across the vast white corridor. She's gone..There are no more traces of her..I sulked in front of the bedroom door, crying. I can't think of anything but to cry, cry, cry. Her words burnt into my head and it kept on repeating and repeating.

A familiar sensation touched me. Tomochin.
"I'm so sorry Minami. It's....it's all my fault.."
"Shut up. It's not your fault Tomochin. Go back.." I can't stop these eyes from crying. Hearing her words made me more horrible.
She pulled me up and wrapped her arms tightly around me. I can feel her warmth embracing my whole body. This..this is what I needed now.
"Minami, stop crying..."
I clutched on her arms which made wrinkles on the shirt she's wearing. I want to stop crying, but I can't.
"Tomochin..why? Why does it have to be like this?" I kept on asking. It's forever recurring "Why!? WHY?!!"

"Minami.." Tomochin pinned me on the door, closing it on the process.
"Tomo...chin.....I don't now...if we should do this" I know what's gonna happen, but I'm too broken right now. I'm too frail, too weak.

"Such beauty is a waste, Minami" she whispered. Her fingers traced along my spine, sending shivers throughout my body. My body starts to tremble. My knees are shaking.
"Tomo..chin..." my body gave up resisting. I was completely succumbed by her actions. My head is turning blank, I can't think of anything.

"I love you Minami..."

"Tomochin, I..."

Her lips touched mine..

Goodbye Acchan...

( ；´Д｀) 板野友美 X 高橋みなみ??????

korin48 · « **Reply #56 on:** January 18, 2013, 01:57:10 PM »

You broke my AtsuMina!!!!! Please explain to Takamina, Acchan!!
Please update soon!

stepk · « **Reply #57 on:** January 18, 2013, 08:18:53 PM »

so...
you break up atsumina
and minami, prefer tomochin?

update

but Im confused.

whiningwillow · « **Reply #58 on:** January 18, 2013, 09:12:14 PM »

but sometimes it happens in relationships right? like you break up with someone, and with the spur of the moment, you try to seek comfort with someone @_@

well, that's my view.. gomen OTL

TakaminaBG · « **Reply #59 on:** January 18, 2013, 09:38:07 PM »

Okay, I'm a hardcore AtsuMina fan!!! But I love TakaTomo so much. For me personaly they are perfect for each other!
If you tell me to choose between AtsuMina and TakaTomo, it's like you telling me to choose between food and water when I'm dying for both.(Did that even make any scense?)
More TakaTomo!!!!