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Offline Archie28

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
« Reply #100 on: March 04, 2013, 05:43:41 AM »
Takamina and Acchan being sweet and such  :heart:

nice update by the way...  :thumbsup
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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
« Reply #101 on: March 04, 2013, 06:09:25 AM »
ahhh come on why flashback

I want to know what happens next

please update soon :bow:
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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
« Reply #102 on: March 04, 2013, 06:44:33 AM »
jeje sexaddichan.. you are so agressive with takaboy..

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
« Reply #103 on: March 04, 2013, 09:57:54 AM »
ahh.. they were so sweet :heart:
Acchan you always pervert :twisted:
and I want to know what will happen too
so please update soon
thanks foe update
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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
« Reply #104 on: March 04, 2013, 11:53:07 AM »
The way they interact was so sweet...

Very nice flashback there

Can't wait to see more

Thank you for the lovely update

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
« Reply #105 on: March 04, 2013, 12:21:36 PM »
It's so cute Acchan want a child with Takamina~

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 14 *update*
« Reply #106 on: March 04, 2013, 06:00:11 PM »
so cute atsumina  :wub:
and a child would like be a cabbage.
that was really funny  :lol:

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #107 on: March 12, 2013, 04:46:33 AM »
Chapter 15


Snow continues to fall across the vast horizon. The view from where I am standing was incredible, the city is covered with blanket of snow. Rooftops are clear as white, the roads, trees even the cars. The snow shines in the darkness of the city, the lights from the windows are nowhere near. I watch the tower from afar as it changes it's color from red to green, making patterns for the Christmas season. The snow continues to fall, it's not stopping, but some point in time it will stop, it will be forgotten and will be remembered when it falls again.

I love her..

There are times that I said to myself that I'll forget her eventually, that my love for her is like the seasons, it will fade, but I was wrong. I never stopped thinking about her..never stopped loving her. In my sleep, I still see her. In my room, I still feel her. In my mind, it's her. And in my heart, it's her. My body longs for every inch of her. Her warmth, her kisses, her embrace, her touch..her
everything.

Hi, hello, how are you? How are you doing? Are you all right? What are you doing lately? Are you busy? How's school? Your grades, how is it? How's your mom? Are you still eating well? What happened? To us?
I can't utter any single word. All these questions, they're all inside my mind. I'm helpless.

"A..Aacha...n.."

Acchan ran towards me and held me tightly with her arms. She's..she's crying.
"I..I'm sorry Minami.." her embrace tightens "I..I just can't lose you. Ever since that day, i can't eat, can't sleep..all I think about is you. In school, I can't bring myself up to talk to you. Every single day was tormenting. Do you know how hard it is to miss that someone you love? Look at me, I'm miserable, miserable without you Minami. I.."
"Why?" my eyes started to cry "You..why did you gave my song? It's mine right? You made it for me. Acchan..that's my song. I..I hate you.."
"Minami..you..you heard it?"
"I hate you.. I..hate it that I love you so much.."

I laid my head on her chest, I..I really miss her. Everyday is not normal without her, like there's something missing, like an artist without a brush. I loved her without second thoughts. I risked, I gave up anything. And now she's back, back into my arms again.
Now, the artist can paint again, paint upon the canvas that has been waiting to be filled with wonderful experience, our experience.

"Darn you..why do have make me wait for this long? You..you dummy.."
"Minami..this will never happen again..I promise"
"You..do you know how much I miss you? It was taking forever.."
"Me too.."

It was starting snow really hard. The wind is getting stronger and stronger. It looks like a snow storm is brewing up. The temperature is getting lower. I guess we should head inside.
"Acchan, let's go inside..it seems that the weather is not gonna be good any minute"
"Okay"

As soon as we got inside, Acchan pushed me on the couch. She went on top of me, she's on all fours.
"What are you doing Acchan?" I gasp for breath knowing what's gonna happen next "Stop.."
"Minami, it's freezing." Acchan stared at me "Minami..do you know how long I've waited for this. It's been months! Oh god, it's killing me.."
"Acchan.." I pulled her closer to me. I can feel her breathing heavily. "You never changed..dummy"
I kissed her like I've never kissed her before. It was wet, deep and romantic. She seems surprised by my sudden actions as she tries to break free and all.
"Mina..mi, wa..wait.." I pulled her forcefully restraining her movements.
"You said you have waited for this right? So stop and let me do it. This ain't gonna happen again if you don't let me"

"I just want to tell you, I love you Minami.."
"I love you too Acchan..shall we go back to where we left off?"
"Naughty cabbage girl"
"What did you say?"
"Lalala~~"
"Grrrrrrrrrr...I'll punish you tonight"

~~The day I met you, like a little flower dancing in the wind
Is far away
There were days when we hurt each other because we were still too young
But now they’re memories we can laugh at together

Nobody knows what’s at the end
Of this long journey
But these uncertain nights will never come again

We can keep walking forever
Together, now and forever
This love I clutch close to my heart
Will never change, this one unique
“I love you”~~







Epilogue

"Mama! Mama!" a cute girl runs to her mom, while holding a bunch of flower on her small tiny hand "Look at this, I'll give this to auntie"
"That was nice of you baby. Ask your mama to help you, okay?"
"Yes mama!" the girl runs to her another mom and tugs her white plaided skirt "Mama, I'll give this to auntie. Will you help me?"
"Oh sure my dear. Let's go"
The three walked hand by hand towards a tree in the middle of the field. The girl placed the flowers beside a big onyx marble piece on the ground.
"Mama, auntie's name was the same as mine. Why is that?"
"Because she's mama's good friend. She lived a good life my dear. I'm sure she'll be happy to see you if she was still here"
"So she's nice like me? So she's a good girl like me?"
"Yes and yes. Haha"
"Let's go everybody. Baby, say goodbye to your auntie"

The small girl waved at the onyx piece on the ground.
"Goodbye auntie Tomomi!"










this is the end of my fic..and i hope you guys like it ^_^

so how was it? :)
« Last Edit: March 12, 2013, 07:56:13 PM by whiningwillow »


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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #108 on: March 12, 2013, 06:22:26 AM »
Awesome fic! Aww cute mini tomo.. but i think that minami in takapapa :B but its ok :B love it!  :thumbup

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #109 on: March 12, 2013, 07:36:41 AM »
Ehh! Why did they have baby? But still cute little tomo and  takapapa<3
Thank for awesome fic!!
« Last Edit: March 12, 2013, 07:45:27 AM by Pdpond »
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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #110 on: March 12, 2013, 09:22:56 AM »
Yeah... Atsumina is back together...

But sadly for Tomochin... she was alone when she died...

Minami didn't accompany Tomochin in her last hour of her time....

I can understand that Minami wanted to be with Atsuko... and she did not have obligation to take care of Tomochin...

But if I was Minami, I would want to be with Tomochin; be with her, try to love her even a little and try to make her happy in her last hour of her life.

So at least she could have a good dream before she was gone. (That's just my opinion, don't mean to offended you (whiningwillow) or anyone else)

Well, it was lovely fic...

Thank you for your great fic....

Can't wait to see more of your creation

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #111 on: March 12, 2013, 02:00:22 PM »
ATSUMINA in the end :cow: :cow: :cow: :cow:

awww... they name their baby Tomomi...  :wub:

so Tomochin died  :cry:

Nice ending :thumbsup :thumbsup :thumbsup
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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #112 on: March 12, 2013, 04:12:09 PM »
So tomochin died in the end.
 I like your story.
Keep up the good work. :thumbup

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #113 on: March 12, 2013, 05:58:48 PM »
It's a good fic thank you :)

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #114 on: March 13, 2013, 01:48:13 AM »
Cute end but I'm sad for Tomochin T_T

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #115 on: March 13, 2013, 04:58:47 PM »
my stories are short compared to the others..but i'll try my best next time (thinking that there's a next time)

thank you again everybody for spending time reading this and leaving comments afterwards

thank you so much :)


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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #116 on: May 02, 2013, 03:12:18 AM »
aw! Why tomochin dies u.u
a good FF
thanks ^_^

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Re: newbie here OTL (Atsumina fic) Chapter 15 + epilogue *end*
« Reply #117 on: February 03, 2015, 06:56:43 AM »
Awww
so sad for Tomochin but I love the Atsumina  :heart:  :heart:

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