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Video novel: ALICE *Dropped*
« on: November 18, 2013, 03:07:23 AM »
I've started reading a video novel in the H!P Fanfic thread, and yes, the story concept of Alice in Wonderland has inspired me.

I hope you all enjoy. (See if you can guess who is "Alice")

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #1 on: November 18, 2013, 07:23:21 AM »
Interesting plot and I guess Alice is jurina or acchan? :inlove:

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #2 on: November 18, 2013, 07:29:52 AM »
Whoa. This is intriguing~ Whatever happened to sweet ol Wonderland LoL :lol:
Nice prologue there, mate.
As for the characters,
I guess Alice is... Mayu?
And the Queen might be Yuki.

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #3 on: November 18, 2013, 07:59:31 AM »
Interesting concept :twothumbs
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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #4 on: November 19, 2013, 12:31:54 AM »
i wanna read moar please!!~  :cow: :bow:
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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #5 on: November 19, 2013, 12:48:32 AM »
Atsumina.

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #6 on: November 19, 2013, 01:33:30 AM »
wah! great prologue!!

will wait for the next part!

Hm... hard to guess who will be the queen and alice and the rabbit ant wah! so manny characters maybe >.< but wah! will wait patiently.

Greetings! 

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #7 on: November 19, 2013, 01:36:18 AM »
curiosity. soooooo interesting!

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #8 on: November 19, 2013, 03:59:32 PM »
I imagined Mayu as Alice though but I don't think Yuki suits the villain here   :nervous
this is interesting  :thumbsup

I shall wait for the chapters  :)
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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #9 on: November 19, 2013, 04:28:14 PM »
Interesting plot

I wonder who will be Alice and the queen

Mayuki, Wmatsui ot Takacchan??

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Prologue)
« Reply #10 on: November 21, 2013, 01:21:42 PM »
All good guesses; I love seeing people interested in my fanfics.

Now, here's Chapter One - "Down the Rabbit Hole"


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Alice-Maeda Atsuko
White Rabbit-Takahashi Minami

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Chapter 1-Down the Rabbit Hole)
« Reply #11 on: November 21, 2013, 01:51:05 PM »
Aw sheet.


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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Chapter 1-Down the Rabbit Hole)
« Reply #12 on: November 21, 2013, 08:04:28 PM »
Aw sheet.



Don't leave, you! I promise you, there will be some AtsuYuu moments, now stay put! :shakeit:

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Chapter 1-Down the Rabbit Hole)
« Reply #13 on: November 22, 2013, 01:29:37 PM »
Aw sheet.



Don't leave, you! I promise you, there will be some AtsuYuu moments, now stay put! :shakeit:

LoL I was just messing around.
I'm usually a silent reader if it involves the TKMNxAtsu.
And I shall wait for your future updates~
<Remembered that he didn't read the first chapter yet, so onward to reading

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Chapter 1-Down the Rabbit Hole)
« Reply #14 on: November 22, 2013, 05:32:48 PM »
atsumina!!~  :heart:
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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Chapter 1-Down the Rabbit Hole)
« Reply #15 on: November 25, 2013, 09:12:45 PM »
Your story is very interesting and the imagery is exceptionally beautiful  :love:. The premise of the story is intriguing and I am very fond of your take on the classic Alice in Wonderland. The trailer was also very good and made the reader want to know more. It seems to depict events very far in the story. I really like the darkness and the eerie atmosphere.

It reminds me a bit of the anime Mahou Shoujo Madoka Magika, I do not know whether you have seen it or not but the element of grief reminds me of it. The melancholic atmosphere and angst also reminded me of the anime AKB0048. That anime was the reason why I started to be interested in knowing about AKB48 and started listening to their music. A very good music indeed  :cathappy:.

You are also a very good writer  :thumbsup and your sentences flow beautifully. There is no need for music and/or pictures since the text brings music and pictures along with it. It would have been fun though if you would have used some fitting AKB48 music in some scenes. It's really sad to see Acchan without any friends  :cry:. It will be interesting to see who the queen is.

Keep up the good work  :cow:. When will you upload the next chapter and do you have a schedule on when you will upload chapters? Will it be bi-weekly or bi-monthly for instance?

Also, for those interested, this is the video novel she said she was reading in this forum: http://forum.jphip.com/index.php?topic=36690.0  :otomerika:
The horror video novel Endless Breakfast. The adventure begins here...

Can you swallow the truth...?

Chapter 1:

Chapter 2:

Chapter 3 will be released December 31 2013 alongside the opening movie with a visual kei song by KAMENO=FREAK.

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Chapter 1-Down the Rabbit Hole)
« Reply #16 on: November 25, 2013, 11:54:21 PM »
^^ Hey. Thanks for the complements.

I really wanted to try out a video novel, because I wanted to stray off my normal writing path and doing something different. Get some new inspiration. I've also learned that all the fanfics I've seen here and read in other sites proved you don't always need music or pictures, cuz you can read the words and they come to you, just like you said.

>///< You're really nice, too, y'know. I thought I was starting to lose my edge in writing and coming out lame, but seeing everyone's supportive comments always make me feel better.

Thanks again, and I can't wait for your update! <3

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Video novel: ALICE (Chapter 2-The Enchanted Forest)
« Reply #17 on: November 27, 2013, 04:11:45 AM »
Sorry, this will be a short update, then I'm taking a break. Forgive me. :bow:



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Characters:
Alice-Maeda Atsuko
White Rabbit-Takahashi Minami
Cheshire Cat-Kojima Haruna
Dodo Bird-Sashihara Rino
Tweedle Dee and Dum-Kashiwagi Yuki and Watanabe Mayu
Rose Princess-Matsui Rena
Caterpillar-Matsui Jun

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Chapter 2-The Enchanted Forest)
« Reply #18 on: November 27, 2013, 10:02:01 AM »
I see TakaHaru.
I see no jealous Ace.
I see possible ATSUYUU! ><

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Re: Video novel: ALICE (Chapter 1-Down the Rabbit Hole)
« Reply #19 on: November 29, 2013, 01:55:54 AM »
^^ Hey. Thanks for the complements.

I really wanted to try out a video novel, because I wanted to stray off my normal writing path and doing something different. Get some new inspiration. I've also learned that all the fanfics I've seen here and read in other sites proved you don't always need music or pictures, cuz you can read the words and they come to you, just like you said.

>///< You're really nice, too, y'know. I thought I was starting to lose my edge in writing and coming out lame, but seeing everyone's supportive comments always make me feel better.

Thanks again, and I can't wait for your update! <3

You are most welcome :).

Yes and don't you agree that a video novel is just slightly different from a written text but gives a very different experience? We want though to have music and pictures in our video novels because they are more of a recorded version of a sound novel or so. It is also because our video novel is a tribute to the godly  :bow: sound novel Umineko no naku koro ni by Ryuukishi07 and 07th Expansion. If you are not familiar with it I highly recommend you check it out  :yep:. We would very much want a video novel to become a genre like sound novels and visual novels. You are helping us making it a possibility  :grin:

Yes that can of course be the case with all kinds of text. But the writer has to be extremely good to make it possible not to use music or pictures in this format. Like you are  :D. I see that you have written many fanfics. When did you first get the idea for this story?

You are very nice to say that I'm nice  :love:. You most certainly are not loosing your edge in writing and this is not lame, that I can assure you. You have a great support here and that is the best. You truly should carry on writing because you are born to write I must say.

We are working hard on finishing the chapter so it can be uploaded on Saturday. It is much more spookier than the first one ;). I am extremely glad to hear that you can not wait for our update. I truly hope that it will not disappoint.  O0

Sorry, this will be a short update, then I'm taking a break. Forgive me. :bow:



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Characters:
Alice-Maeda Atsuko
White Rabbit-Takahashi Minami
Cheshire Cat-Kojima Haruna
Dodo Bird-Sashihara Rino
Tweedle Dee and Dum-Kashiwagi Yuki and Watanabe Mayu
Rose Princess-Matsui Rena
Caterpillar-Matsui Jun

Nooooes. When will you be back with the next update? Of course you must take a break in between.Especially since you have released many chapters within a very short time-frame.
« Last Edit: November 29, 2013, 02:11:04 AM by Bijozuki »
The horror video novel Endless Breakfast. The adventure begins here...

Can you swallow the truth...?

Chapter 1:

Chapter 2:

Chapter 3 will be released December 31 2013 alongside the opening movie with a visual kei song by KAMENO=FREAK.

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