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Re: [AtsuMina] Zenpen: When the Time Stops
« Reply #20 on: May 12, 2014, 02:28:00 PM »
@dearacchan, Justqle, Chichay12, liabont: i'm pretty sure you guys already have an idea of what will happen to them in the near future... but... i believe i still have better things in mind hehe

i'm listening, so what's "the better things" then..?  :P

acchan got threatening letter from her fans maybe  :shocked just random thoughts of mine,

waiting for your update, thank you..

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.2 05/11/2014 Update!
« Reply #21 on: May 13, 2014, 10:01:25 AM »
@Kakeru15: you're right! minami's starting to realize her system is slowly changing the way it used to be
@lezperv: yes i can't believe too! i think minami's only making yuko as an excuse to herself, unconsciously what she's trying to avoid are those things she doesn't want to see again hehe
@iLeo221: hi too! ah kojiharu ofcourse! it will take a little more time before her appearance though.. but she's on her way don't worry!
@cisda83: i believe in this chapter you will find out the first details hehe
@Feat, chiqinna: well mariko might just be the reason why atsuko cried, so I wonder too..
@liabont: haha! so you want things in a quicker way.. i bet you will enjoy what will happen at the end of this chapter
@dearacchan: yes, better things. and i'll explain it to you soon :)

again to everyone else, thanks for reading my atsumina fic! :bow:

When the Time Stops
Chapter 3

Since I entered highschool, I've always been the top student of our class. I belong to Class 1-A, the highest section in first year. And being at the top of this section also means being the overall top student of all first year sections as well. That's quite a heavy responsibility for me, I need to be a role model to my co-students. So what kind of a role model am I if I can't even focus on class today! I kept worrying about her. Atsuko. How is she? I hope she's feeling okay now. And what's worse? She's on Class 1-B, which means there's only one wall separating us this moment. Knowing this kills me more. I spent the whole morning class only thinking about her and now we're about to take our lunch break.

"Takamina, try these! This is also one of Tomochin's recipes. I made it myself!" Yuko's offering me her bento.

Oh, not again... Since Yuko got a copy of Itano-san's recipe, she always try to make them herself. But as what I have said before, she's just a very hardworking person. Which means...

"Yuko, don't you think it's time to give up? You've been doing this for days already. How can you even tell this is edible!"

Honestly speaking, the food really looks awful and so is the taste.

"But I already tried to practice my cooking like a hundred times! I thought practice makes perfect? Then maybe it's Tomochin's recipe's fault!"

I rolled my eyes. Now she's blaming the recipe.

"Yuko, I bet it's not. I read her recipe and I can tell that her measurements, ingredients and procedures is well perfectly written."

"Are you really my friend, Takamina? Because I know friends encourage each other!" Yuko pouted.

"I'm your friend that's why I'm telling these things to you! Maybe cooking is not really your forte. I believe there's still something out there that suits perfectly for you."

We're still in the middle of our slightly friendly conversation when the class vice-president called my name.

"Takahashi-san!"

"Ah, vice-president. What is it?" I asked.

"I just came to inform you that the student council will be having an emergency meeting after class today." She said.

"Is that really urgent?"

"I don't know the details. They just asked me to pass this message to you."

Our meetings in the student council are usually scheduled beforehand. I wonder why it's so sudden this time.

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The meeting has not started yet when I arrived at the student council room. And I was surprised to see Shinoda-san inside. I took my seat and waited for the meeting to start. When all the student council members are finally completed, Shinoda-san then stood up and speak to us.

"I am Shinoda Mariko, third year and the president of the Drama club. In behalf of our club and our senior members, we are requesting to have another school play this year."

After she said that, all the members of the student council started chatting and giving their own opinions. Me? I remained silent. The first thing came to my mind is Atsuko. I have a feeling that this is somewhat related with what happened between the two of them this morning. Shinoda-san continued to speak, so then we listened to her.

"Everyone knows that for us seniors, this will be our last year in highschool. I believe for the past three years our school became more popular to the other schools because of our theater plays. This is why we're humbly requesting you to let us have our last performance this year. And to make this happen, we need your help to coordinate with the school's general management to promote and sponsor our play."

The student council room is suddenly filled with noise coming from the members discussing the request of the drama club. Some agree and some don't, mostly of the pro's came from the senior members. Ofcourse they also understand the feeling of graduating soon.

"We wanted the performance be early this year because after this, our graduating members will be focusing more on the preparation for the college entrance exams. I do hope you understand our situation." She sincerely said, then she bowed before us.

The meeting was then adjourned, the members decided to discuss more about the request thoroughly before the agreement. As everyone leaves the student council room, I saw Shinoda-san took a glance of me. Does she actually know me? I wanted to ask her what happened to her and Atsuko this morning, but I don't have enough courage to approach her.

And now that I mention it, I wonder if Atsuko is still in her classroom. It's been days since the last time I checked on her after class. I thought I won't be doing this again, but there's something in me that wanted to see her now. When I reached her classroom, I took a peek inside again. And yes she is still there, sitting on the same spot beside the window where she used to be. She's holding some papers. I entered the room.

"Hi, Atsuko. You're still here again." I greeted her then she looked at me. Her eyes... I'm wondering if there's magic on those. I feel like I'm melting whenever they met mine.

"Minami, it's been a while. I'm just reading the scripts for our upcoming play." She answered.

"Ah, yes I heard. The drama club is requesting another school play this year for the senior members."

She looked away. I didn't mean to upset her. Is she sad because Shinoda-san is graduating soon? Why does my chest hurts just thinking of that?

"I.. uhm.. saw you crying this morning. I actually came here because I wanted to know if there's anything that I can help." I went closer and sit right next to her.

"It was just a little argument in the drama club." She paused. "Minami, can I ask you a question?"

"Sure, anything." I said.

"What will you do if you can't grant a request of a person who's important to you?" She asked.

"That's a tough situation. Maybe I will weigh things first. I need to know which is more important, that person's happiness or mine." I responded.

"You're really smart, Minami." She smiled at me again. "You're asking earlier if there's anything that you can help, right? Then can you help me rehearse today?"

"Me? But I don’t know anything about acting."

"Don't worry, all you have to do is read out the lines from this script." She handed me the paper she's holding.

"O-Okay. So which part is mine here?" I looked at the script.

"You’ll play the character of the leading man. Since it has the most number of dialogues with my character."

Then I helped her rehearse. I never thought it would be this fun, at first we're just exchanging dialogues. It's not a very serious practice actually, we sometimes laugh because of our mistakes. Until we reached the end of the script. I then noticed what kind of scene is on the climax part. Well, it’s only a rehearsal so I must not be bothered by it. I read straight and finished off my character's line.

She paused. Why does she keep staring at me?

"Hmm.. Did I read the wrong lines?" I asked her.

"Well actually.. the ending scene is critical for me.. It’s much better if you help me visualize on it."

Help her visualize? Does she mean...

"Minami.. you have to kiss me exactly the way it was described on this part." And she said it. Did I really hear it, right?!

"A-Are you serious?! I-I thought I will just read out the lines from the script?!" I panicked.

"Oh.. I'm sorry, I understand. It’s okay, if you don’t want to." She apologized, her voice sounded disappointed.

"Atsuko, wait! I-I’ll try my best to help you..."

Oh no.. I just blurted it out. I didn't even know how to kiss! I can do this... if this is the only way I can help her... yes, I'm just helping her... right?

I read out my character's last few lines again, until the kissing part came. Slowly... gently... I put my lips on hers. My God... her lips are so soft. So this is how a kiss feels like. Then she kissed me back. Wait, is that written on the script, too? I don't remember it but I don't care. We stayed in that position for few seconds, I think? Actually, I'm not sure. I feel like the time stopped for me again, and I don't want the clock to start ticking back.

We break off the kiss. We both stayed silent. She’s blushing hard.. but why? I bet she has already kissed many actors before, so this doesn’t mean anything to her.

"A-Ano... you think I did well?" I started to speak again.

"Y-Yes.. uhm.. thank you. Let’s call this a day." She stood up and took her things with her. She started to take a few steps away before she speaks to me again.

"Minami... I have my own reasons."

Reasons? What does she mean by that?

"I'm not sure of what you are thinking right now. But just to let you know.. during our plays, it's either we only fake or cut off the kissing scenes..." She paused.

Then I heard the most surprising words so far in my entire life.

"I just had my first real one a moment ago."

She gave me a smile again before she walked out the door. She left me alone, speechless. So it means... it was also her first kiss... and I'm her first... My heart... why are you racing so fast? Someone help me, for I guess I'm having a heart attack here.

TBC

and i'm also having a heart attack because of them lol
i hope i can able to update fast for the next chapters...
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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #22 on: May 13, 2014, 10:17:21 AM »
Awww X3

The chapter is too short, it doesn't satisfy my hunger!!!  :lol:

I'm still confused with what happened between Mariko and Atsuko, but I have a really strong feeling that Mariko confessed and that Atsuko (clearly) like someone else. Also, what did Atsuko meant at the end, about her having some reasons for something?...

I wonder when did Atsuko started liking Minami and I can't believe (yes I can) that she is sooo bold to make Minami kissed her! but it was sooo cute!!! It's their first kiss  :wub:

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #23 on: May 13, 2014, 10:53:39 AM »
Wooh..

we've got a situation here #putoxygenmasktomyself

very curious about what will happen next..


i hope you update soon.. thank you.


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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #24 on: May 13, 2014, 01:19:34 PM »
They are each other 1st kiss

SO GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOD

What's going to happen next?

What's it that Atsuko need to do to help Mariko?

Is it why Atsuko was crying because she didn't want to give her 1st kiss to Mariko?

Can't wait to find out

Thank you

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #25 on: May 13, 2014, 02:09:10 PM »
waahhhh my atsumina kissing...
please update soon author-san

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #26 on: May 13, 2014, 02:20:04 PM »
I swear the ending makes me feel doki doki  :heart:

Kyaaaaaaaa  I like it  :ptam-shy:

Cant wait to know what's going to happen next ! I'm also curious on what happen between acchan and mariko  :dunno:

Awesome chapter btw  :D

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #27 on: May 13, 2014, 03:13:19 PM »
Kyyyaaaa!!!! u killed me!!! XD
OMFG! too sweet! I got a sugar rush because of you! :P
My heart beats like crazy! hahahahah ^^!

really love the update! It was short but veeery sugoi! thx u! ;)

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« Reply #28 on: May 13, 2014, 04:17:15 PM »
Yeayeay they're both so cute  :love:
Thx for update  :cow:

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #29 on: May 13, 2014, 04:49:16 PM »
Atsumina kissing scene... Yeah!! :twothumbs

Does the kiss mean atsuko like minami too?  :huhuh

I was wondering why atsuko cry :? Hmm

Thank you for update author-san, please update soon (asap) HAHA :grin: :thumbsup

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #30 on: May 13, 2014, 06:00:29 PM »
Wow minami is clever in this story?? Lol
kyaaaa, i like the kissing scene!  XD
Minami start having feeling for atsuko. how about atsuko? does she feel the same way as minami?

waiting yoo for the update  :twothumbs

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #31 on: May 14, 2014, 02:26:57 AM »
Wow?! Pfft atsuko really clever.haha XD
Minami she just do what atsuko said to her...
Damn I'm started ti like this story. Tq so much author san. .
Will be waiting for next update :yossi:

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« Reply #32 on: May 14, 2014, 01:08:08 PM »
Aww that kiss~
atsuko always get her way to make her minami moved XD
like this chap~
just love to read alot of fiction story

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #33 on: May 14, 2014, 01:53:58 PM »
That kiss... :hiakhiakhiak:
What if that script isnt real one and Acchan wrote the fake one?? Clever move Acchan :hehehe:
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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #34 on: May 14, 2014, 01:56:58 PM »
acchan so cute ib the last part  :heart: :heart: :heart:
takamina needs to move before somenthing happend
pls update
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« Reply #35 on: May 15, 2014, 02:27:52 AM »
this is a cute kiss :3

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« Reply #36 on: May 15, 2014, 04:36:14 AM »
Acchan is already starting to like takamina? Or did she already liked Takamina from the first? XD
That moment when acchan asked takamina to kiss her! So cute! :inlove: :inlove:
Please update soon author-san :twothumbs :twothumbs

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.3 05/13/2014 Update!
« Reply #37 on: May 16, 2014, 06:01:31 PM »
@lezperv: gomen if it was short.. my writing per chapter usually doesn't exceed 2000 words, i find it difficult to make it longer :( but i try to make it up to my readers by updating as fast as i can
@dearacchan: so here's what happened next, sorry if i kept you waiting..
@cisda83, Kakeru15: about why atsuko cried, i'm afraid it's still not mentioned in this chapter..
@liabont, ubulubulbilu, Haruko: i'm glad you guys like how they had their first kiss!
@menamarco96: hey, i'm glad you like it too! so let's call it quits? hehe
@iLeo221: oh please stay alive for the next chapters hehe!
@Justqle: yes i made minami's character a genius here lol
@noah minami, deguchi, korin48: i agree atsuko is very clever and minami's quite obedient haha
@triela: i think minami still don't know what to do, since everything's a first to her
@ayudewi6: aachan's true feelings, you'll find it soon :)

again thanks to all my readers and to those who gave me thank you posts! :bow:
so here's my new chapter...

When the Time Stops
Chapter 4


That evening, I arrived home later than usual and dinner is already served on the table. I usually arrive few minutes earlier than my father, but for the first time he's already home before me. I didn't notice I spent too much time at school.

"Minami, sit down and we're about to start dinner." My mother said. She cooked my favorite dish tonight, but unfortunately my stomach feels full eventhough I haven't eaten anything yet. I tried to eat but I only took a half spoonful of food.

"Are you sick, Minami? It's the first time you don't eat your mother's katsudon." My father asked. He knows I can't resist katsudon, I can eat three or more bowls of it! So this is really weird, what's wrong with my stomach?

"I just don't feel like eating tonight, Dad. Maybe I should already rest myself upstairs." I excused myself and went to my room.

I laid on my bed and started to have flashbacks of that kiss. Atsuko.. I wonder what are you thinking? I'm trying to convince myself that we only did that just to help her. And besides we're both girls so it doesn't count as a real kiss. Then my phone suddenly rang so I answered it.

"Takamina? You answered so fast! Are you waiting for someone?" It's just Yuko who called.

Wait, am I expecting that Atsuko will call me? But we didn't even exchange numbers yet!

"No one ofcourse. It just happens that my phone is near me. So, why did you call?" I asked.

"I can't totally understand our homework! Can you explain how to answer this over the phone again?"

But I'm not in the mood for other things tonight.

"Yuko, I'm already sleepy so I'll just let you copy mine tomorrow, okay?"

"Really? Wow, I didn't expect that from you! Then, I'll see you early tomorrow. Oyasumi!" She hangs up.

I lied to Yuko. The truth is that.. I can't sleep. I kept awake the whole night, like I'm excited or something. I never thought I will look forward for another day, since like I said before everyday's just the same to me. But things became different now, I can't wait for tomorrow to come so that I can see Atsuko again.

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After the next day's classes, the student council called for a meeting again. The members finally decided to help the drama club for their request, since it will build a better name for our school. It will then be forwarded to the school upper management. We know it's just a formality, since the management's decision usually depends on the student council. So, their play is now a sureball.

I'm excited to tell the good news to Atsuko, so I hurriedly went to her classroom again after the student council meeting. But unfortunately, she's not there.

"Are you looking for Aachan?" I heard a voice from behind, so I turned around.
"I think she's at the drama club right now, they started their practice for the play." It's Itano-san.

"Oh, I see. Thank you for letting me know, Itano-san."

"Please call me Tomochin, since you're friends with Aachan and Yuko. So can I call you Takamina, too? That's how Yuko calls you whenever she mentions you to me."

"Sure." I answered, then we started to walk together.

"So how's Yuko and her cooking lately? Please bear a little more with her. She's like on her soul searching about her capabilities. I know she sucks at cooking, doesn't she?" I whispered the last question.

"Well, uhm.. I like her fighting spirit.." Tomochin answered.

"Oh, come on you don't need to hold back on what you really wanted to say.." I giggled.

"Yeah.. I think so, too.." She whispered back.

We're both laughing as we walked down the stairs. Then we met Atsuko on our way, she's with Shinoda-san.

"Oh, Atsuko! Hi!" I greeted her.

"Hey, Minami..." Her face seems serious looking at us.

"I went to your classroom earlier but you weren't there. I wanted to inform you about the result of the drama club's request but it seems you already know."

"Yes, Mariko-senpai already informed us. We had our first practice today. By the way, this is Shinoda Mariko, our club president." Atsuko introduced her.

"You're Takahashi Minami, I already know. You're the first year representative of the student council. I heard lots about you." Shinoda-san said.

She heard of me? From whom? This is the closest distance I've been infront of Shinoda-san. She really has perfect face. And she's... TALL. I suddenly pity myself.

"Well, you seem to be having fun." Atsuko said in a straight tone.

"Ah yes, we're just talking about Yuko's awful cooking. Right, Tomochin?"

I saw Atsuko's face expression changed when I mentioned Tomochin's name. I wonder why.

"Is that so? Anyway, our practice for today has finished so were about to go home. See you around then." After that, they left us.

So, they went home together? I stared at their backs as they walk farther. Shinoda-san's taller than Atsuko, and Atsuko's taller than me. I sighed.

"That's weird." Tomochin suddenly spoke.

"Eh? Nani?" I asked.

"Aachan. She forgot to greet me."

Oh, now that I think of it, I noticed that too.

"Maybe she has lot of things going on her mind. She's might be under pressure too because of their upcoming play." I tried to convince Tomochin not to think anything bad. Then we also both went home after.

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The drama club's performance will be held after a month, so they have plenty of time for their practice. And for that one whole month, Atsuko and I rarely see each other. She's so much busy and focused on their play. I sometimes meet her on school hallways but she's always with Shinoda-san, we just usually wave hi to each other and that's it. I also tried taking a peek on their practice place, but there are lots of student fans on their front door watching them and I can't get through. I think these people will kill me if they knew that their ultimate crush just gave me her first kiss. Well, somehow it makes me feel flattered.

When the day of their performance came, the members of the student council were asked to help the drama club. We are given tasks to be the front gate receptionists for the visitors coming from the other schools. Great, now I can't even watch her perform. This is killing me, I want to get out of here! The play is already on going and yet I'm still here checking some random names on this list. Is this even important? I badly wanted to see her perform! Then luckily, Yuko passed by.

"Yuko! Thank goodness! Can you stay here in place of me for only a few minutes? I just need to go somewhere." I asked her a favor. Then I hurriedly went away after she nodded.

"The play is about to end soon! So hurry up!" She shouted when I'm already far from her. I think Yuko already knows where I'm going.

When I arrived at their performance venue, it was already the ending scene. My excitement faded away when I saw what happened next. Atsuko just let Shinoda-san kissed her... on her lips. It lasted only for a second, but for me it's still a kiss. I thought they were only faking or cutting-off the kissing scenes? Atsuko, why did you have to tell such stories to me? Then they close the stage curtain, I started to hear rounds of applause. When the casts appeared on stage again, they receive a standing ovation from the audience. The drama club's performance is really a hit, I'm sure the school is proud of them. Atsuko's eyes widened when she saw me from the audience. I stare at her for few more seconds before I turn away and leave the place. I went back where Yuko is.

"Oh! You're back too soon! So how was the play, Taka.....mi...na..??" Yuko stopped and looked at me.

I can't hold it back anymore. My tears started dropping. I ran to Yuko and hugged her, I don't want anyone to see my face like this. I didn't speak a word, I just cried as silent as I could. This is another first that Atsuko has done to me, but it's not her fault. I knew from the start that the kiss we shared meant nothing. I think something's wrong with me. Now, I feel like my heart is in pain. This is the first time my heart has ever been broken.

TBC

gomen minna! but i promise...
chapter 5 will surely answer all your questions!

thanks for reading! :)
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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.4 05/16/2014 Update!
« Reply #38 on: May 16, 2014, 06:45:59 PM »
NO!

My Minami is crying, FIX THIS!!!

I like that Atsuko was jealous, so she didn't even say hi to Tomochin, but the distance between her and Minami is GAH!!!
The kiss from the play only further confirms that Mariko confessed to Atsuko or something like that X3
I bet Atsuko was the one who requested the student council to stay outside so that Minami won't see her kiss Mariko. I can totally imagine the shock on her face when she saw Minami.
Yuko, comfort your best friend, okay?

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Re: [AtsuMina] ZENPEN: When the Time Stops Ch.4 05/16/2014 Update!
« Reply #39 on: May 16, 2014, 08:53:22 PM »
Omg noooo...Takamina dont cry

And what is going on with Acchan and Mariko relationship?!

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