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« Reply #340 on: August 12, 2006, 05:02:27 PM »
great work freya86!

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« Reply #341 on: August 12, 2006, 06:24:33 PM »
The cover is great Freya 86!
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« Reply #342 on: August 12, 2006, 07:57:37 PM »
The water was beautiful. It had a slight silver glow to it. Reflecting more that usual. Steam floated off the water and clouded up the room. The palours own private sento.

Konno dipped her big toe in. The hot water made her skin tingle and form goosebumps. Little by little she edged into the warming bath with a relaxed "ahhhh"
Makoto had been held up at the shower stalls with her hair. She had started rinsing her hair when she remembered she had left her shampoo back in the lockers. Mari came to her rescue by lending her some of her own.

"MODS?"

"Beggers can't be choosers. Take it or leave it"

Makoto washed her hair and happily walked over to the bath to join her friend. She stumbled stupidly over the steps and into the water. The steam making her nose run a little. There were two loud splashs followed by manic laughter that alerted Makoto of Kago and Tsuji had entered the bath. Another splash sounded, louder than the others. Makoto looked around the ripppling surface of the bath to see Yaguchi surfacing with a smile on her face. Content with the amount of water she had managed to dump on everyone. Konno's hand found Makoto's and tugged her towards the corner she was sitting in. They fondled each other lightly, taking advantage of the privacy and sensuality of the sento.

"Oh, get a room!" Kago teased, splashing water at the happy couple.

Their blushing would have been more obvious if the hot water hadnt made them so flushed. Makoto splashed water back.

"Something makes me think you're jealous"

Kago giggled and waded over to Tsuji, latching her arms firmly around her. "Why would I? I've got Nono!"
The pair giggled, making mock-kissing faces at each other.

The teasing was broken up suddenly as the bathtub of girls fell silent as a sexy shadow cast itself near the doorway. Yossui walked awkwardly to the shower stalls and proceeded to wash her hair and body. Nobody spoke a word the entire time until she was standing at the entrance of the bath glaring at them. Her beautiful shaped body on display, being visually-caressed by all.

"What are you looking at?" She growled.

Tsuji was the one brave enough (or foolish enough) to speak. "Nice hair cut you got there Yossui"

She pointed to the region in question. The crutch.

"You know what? I offically hate you" Yossui turned on her heel and found herself a different bath.

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« Reply #343 on: August 12, 2006, 08:39:38 PM »
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Tsuji was the one brave enough (or foolish enough) to speak. "Nice hair cut you got there Yossui"

She pointed to the region in question. The crutch.

"You know what? I offically hate you" Yossui turned on her heel and found herself a different bath.


nice remark tsuji....:ROTFLMAO:

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« Reply #344 on: August 12, 2006, 10:23:09 PM »
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Kago giggled and waded over to Tsuji, latching her arms firmly around her. "Why would I? I've got Nono!"
The pair giggled, making mock-kissing faces at each other.


Wow, more W Rabu! You're trying to make me die from happiness aren't you?

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"What are you looking at?" She growled.

Tsuji was the one brave enough (or foolish enough) to speak. "Nice hair cut you got there Yossui"

She pointed to the region in question. The crutch.

"You know what? I offically hate you" Yossui turned on her heel and found herself a different bath.


ROFL. That's all I can say, just ROFL.
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« Reply #345 on: August 12, 2006, 11:54:59 PM »
LOL @ Tsuji's remark. xD

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« Reply #346 on: August 13, 2006, 06:10:54 AM »
ahaha haircut :P stupid tsuji


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« Reply #347 on: August 13, 2006, 06:55:58 AM »
Rika had gone back to get her nails done with Shibata and wouldnt join Yossui for a while. Until then she had to sit by herself and bare the jeering from the other side of the bath. The door opened again, this time Eri staggered in looking shocked and distraught. Yossui shook her head and tsked as Eri made her way over to her.

"I feel your pain..." Yossui put her hand over her heart to sympathise.

Eri laughed weakly. Trying to rid herself of the horror. "...It..I..Buh...Eih"

Every 'out of place' hair was removed from this poor girls body to prepare for the concert. Her skin was a little red. A reaction from the vicious waxing. Judging by the expression on her face it was her first time and Pookie showed her no mercy.

"If we werent naked a I would hug you"

Eri smiled. Yossui's words were just sick and twisted enough to make sense to the young girl.

"HAPPY!" Rika cried out, sliding into the water and paddling towards Yossui. She stopped half way and stared at the pale Kamei. "What the hell happened?"

"She was done" Yossui informed.

Rika rolled her eyes. "Drama queens"

Those two words had a harsher effect than expected. Yossui stood up and stormed out of the sento, closely followed by Kamei.

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« Reply #348 on: August 13, 2006, 08:42:15 AM »
Warning: I do not think this is worth a perv so Ims till posting it here. If you are offended in any way by a kinky ReinaXMaki happening then dont read on.
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With most of the girls out, Maki and Reina thought this to be the best time to explore each other. They shut off all distractions, unhooked the phone, turned off mobiles, locked the doors, closed the curtains and sat facing each other on the bed. Reina sucked her bottom lip expectantly.

"So...." She trailed off. Maki fidgeted uncomfortably. "Do you even want to do these kinds of things?"

Maki nodded, turning her head to hide her red cheeks. Reina took a deep breath. She felt stupid and a little perverted having to guide someone like Maki through something like this.

"Well, Yossui advised you to...uh...start something..."

A hard lump formed in Maki's throat and her hands suddenly went ice cold to the point where she swore they were going to drop off. Stupid Yossui and her advice giving. Maki was entering a domain which she knew nothing about. NOTHING!

"I have no idea what to do" Maki admitted bluntly.

"Do anything!"

There was an awkward silence. Maki hugged her knees tight.

"Promise you wont look?"

"Huh?"

"Can you shut your eyes?"

Reina couldnt believe the request at first but seeing as they were making more progress in this hour than had over the week it was well worth trying. She shut her eyes tight.

"Dont peek ok?"

Maki extended a nervous hand before stopping in mid-air. "You're peeking!"

"Am not!"

"You are I saw!"

Reina groaned. Opened her eyes and for a moment Maki thought she was going to leave but she didnt. Instead she went to the cloest and tied a bandanna around her head so it covered her eyes like a blind fold.

"There is this better?" Reina blindly made her way back to the bed and sat down.

Maki waved her hands in front of her face, still not convinced, gave Reina a quick jab in the side. Caught unaware, she squealed and ordered Maki to be serious.

She looked kind of strange just sitting there on the bed with a red bandanna over her eyes. Her lips were poised, waiting, possibly expecting to be kissed. Maki extended a lone finger to trace those lips and down her neck.

Reina's hands were in her lap holding tightly to the material of her pants, resisting the temptation to touch back. Maki's watched Reina's body react as she let both of her hands outline her body. Brushing over her skin like a breeze, letting goosebumps form. Reina titled her head back allowing a path for Maki's lips to travel. From the lips to the collar bone. Pressing her lips lightly against the soft skin and stopping only when she became obstructed by clothing. She removed it carefully. Dropping it silently next to her on the end of the bed.

Maki sat back to admire Reina's body, hunched over to hide her embarrassment. Her hair fell forward covering the newly exposed flesh. The black making a total contrast to the paler skin. She looked innocent, vunerable but completely sexy at the same time. Maki took hold of her wrists, guiding her to the centre of the bed and lying her down. She ran her right hand down her reddening cheek and over Reina's soft bust, covered only by a floral bra. Tugging at the hooks, it came loose and was discarded beside the bed. The sudden cold air mixed with a shot of adrenaline made Reina's nipples harden. Darking in colour. She arched her back. Urging Maki on. She strangled the pillow above her head to relieve her sexual tension.

Those firm lips locked over her nipples and sucked ever so gently. She placed a leg between Reina's thigh to gain better access. Hovering over top, her shirt tickled Reina's naked stomach. She stripped herself of her own shirt and bra, lowering herself again so their bodies came in contact. Reina could feel Maki's nipples dancing over her own. It drove her wild. She desperately made a grab for Maki's face, pulling her up close and deep kissing her while her hands did what they handed wanted to do for so long.

The pleasure turned to pain. White pain that radiated from her face all the way down to her finger tips. She let out a frustrated cry.

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« Reply #349 on: August 13, 2006, 08:43:57 AM »
NG

O.K SCENE: Instead she went to the cloest and tied a bandanna around her head so it covered her eyes like a blind fold.

NG SCENE: Instead she went to the cloest and tied it around her head so it covered her eyes like a blind fold

I always forget nouns!! Doors around bodies...now closets around heads...!

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« Reply #350 on: August 13, 2006, 09:18:58 AM »
"With most of the girls out, Maki and Reina thought this to be the best time to explore each other."

best line EVER!! :D

and dancing nipples :P hehe you use such descriptive words Mikan!! good job XD


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« Reply #351 on: August 13, 2006, 09:22:33 AM »
Takahashi's eyes flickered then opened. The light was overwhelming. White walls, doors and beds surrounded her filling her with a history of this place. It was a room of care, built with love but laced with sadness. She vaguely recognised it. It was set out much like a hospital. The positioning of the beds and tables. A desk near the door covered in papers and medical boxes. It was just like a ward but there was no nurse and the whole room had a feeling of simplicity. Lacking any fancy equiptment or patient charts Ai started to have an idea of where she might be.

A sick bay.

But where? And why?

As if god himself stretched out his hand, the sun vanished and the room became dull, littered with shadows. In the corner stood one in human form. If it hadnt advanced on her she wouldnt have seen it at all. With each step forward a new detail came to light. It was a woman, no - a young girl. Wearing a navy school uniform. The standard red bow tied loosely around her neck. Ai tried to sit up in the bed but she was held in position by invisible ropes. Another step was taken by the ghostly figure. The little light there was in the room showing the finer details. Her right hand was limp at her side while her left was tense, ridged like a claw. Beneath her neatly combed hair, pinned back by a butterfly hair pin, shone two lifeless eyes that reflected the world. They were glazed to the point of almost seeming milky. The rest of her face was hidden behind a medical mask apart from the bridge of her nose which showed no significant importance to piecing together the identity of this girl. As the last detail was revealed, the girl was now lingering as Ai's side. They stared at each other for what felt like enternity. A very cold enternity. Without warning the girl spoke. Her voice showing curiosity in each word that felt like knives cutting you open and filling you with salted-dread.

"Watashi tte....kirei?"

The tense hand covered her face as she uttered the last word. Ever so slowly removing the mask to show the disfigured face beneath. The cheeks freshly assaulted with open wounds and burns made Ai freeze in fear. Her eyes locked on this poor soul whose mouth was was sown together before being cut to twice its origanal length.

The white light shone again through the windows and engulfed the entire room. Ai let out a silent scream.






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For those of you who have no idea what the hell I was talking about I will fill you in. In english I thought this would sound silly so the dialouge was kept in its origanal Japanese. Bluekinoko happen to agree with me on this one.

Watashi = (girls word only) I
tte = " " (quotation marks)
Kirei = Beautiful, pretty or clean (in the context its Beautiful)

Lit. "I" Beautiful?
Translated -  Am I beautiful?

Medical masks! Now you see people in Japan where these all the time. I think there was even a MM girl woken up wearing one. I think it was ishikawa. anyway. If you have a cold its just good manners to where one. Its like the mask that surgeons where.

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« Reply #352 on: August 13, 2006, 09:29:18 AM »
thanks for those translation doki doki 96 please:)

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« Reply #353 on: August 13, 2006, 10:27:51 AM »
Wow, that was scary!!! What the hell's going on???

But, on the other hand, yay for more beauty parlor action!!!

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« Reply #354 on: August 13, 2006, 05:42:41 PM »
Hold up, did you just put kuchisake onna in your fanfic?

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« Reply #355 on: August 13, 2006, 06:08:11 PM »
Actually this is based on TRUE scary story that happened to bluekinoko

One day after school she was sitting infront of the heater in her room. Someone suddenly appeared in the corner of the room and walked over to her. Long black hair and dark uniform and the medical mask. Yuki (bluekinoko) was shocked. She didnt know who the girl was. Suddenly the girl spoke in Japanese to her. "Watashi tte Kirei?"
And the girl took off her mask. Her mouth was all gray and disgusting and her mouth was cut wide.

I told her that girl was Kuchisake onna. We couldnt believe it! She visited Yuki in Australia. haha!

So...Well yes. The girl is Kuchisake Onna but also the girl that visited Yuki because apparently that girl who visited was a young girl about 17

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« Reply #356 on: August 13, 2006, 06:42:26 PM »
Holy sh!t, that's scary. Kowaii yo! >.<

Wow to the Reina/Maki action, though. :O

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« Reply #357 on: August 13, 2006, 08:40:20 PM »
:shock: I hate scary story

I know I am such a wuzz that I almost skipped chapter 95 XD

but no matter what I still :heart: this fic

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« Reply #358 on: August 13, 2006, 10:38:38 PM »
Wow, what a contrast. Yay Doki Doki!! :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart:  Lol. It makes me giggle that all the hearts beat in time.

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« Reply #359 on: August 14, 2006, 08:14:55 AM »
Aww I missed a couple of chapters. But yay cuz I get a nice long read.

Now there's a fight between beautiful Maki x Reina images and scary watashi.... kirei images in my head. Look what your incredibly real writing has done :( :P

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