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« Reply #420 on: December 29, 2006, 10:43:17 PM »
Wo! an (sometimes) angry Yossie!
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« Reply #421 on: December 31, 2006, 09:13:27 AM »
My.....head....is spinning...and I have like...what 5, 2, 8...no...4 hours till the freaking count down..4 or five. Jesus, why am I here.

Love your story Erink, I just..love it!! Im surprised you remember your story line cause I totally would have forgotten where I was going with it. (Do you like cauliflower? I love it. Especially with the cheese bake)

So... Im cuious to find out where Erika has turned up and Im sure you have a funny answer for it.

I alwyas wonder..Is Erink a funny girl? (ur a girl right? I think we went through this before). Are you a funny kid? Like, in a class are you the comedian or do you withhold all ur funny and cynical comments? Yeah...I wonder. Lets be friends, ok? Even though you like Biyuuden, I'll forgive you and be your friend (Erika is just a cutie and thats really my only opinion).

Sorry to kinda blog,love, then leave you. Keep up the great work kiddo

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« Reply #422 on: January 02, 2007, 08:15:14 AM »
Hey erink, don't you sometimes feel like the story has a life of its own? It's really long, and it keeps getting better, really. :D
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« Reply #423 on: January 07, 2007, 06:40:36 AM »
5 Minutes Remaining
Kei's Room

"How low can you go?!"
"How low can you go?!"
The girls in the room continued chanting as Murata struggled to go make it without dropping her heavily alcoholic coconut concoction with a paper umbrella to boot.
In the midst of the excitement Tsuji pulled Mari aside.
"ETA?" Mari asked, still not taking her eyes off of Murata.
"4 Minutes."
Mari thrust her coconut up in the air as Murata successfully cleared.
"Whoo!"
"Aloha!" Miki yelled as she half assed something resembling a hula on her way over to Mari. When she reached her destination she bumped butts with Mari and added a "Dunn!" sound effect for good measure.
"Aloha!" Mari greeted.
Miki danced her way back to the bar and Mari watched her for a bit before turning back to the intense limbo competition.
"How much more time do you think we have before she gets here?" Tsuji asked.
Two loud slams echoed throughout the room as the festivites came to a crashing halt.
"WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON!?"
Without turning to face the door Mari responded.
"Not long at all."

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« Reply #424 on: January 07, 2007, 07:20:23 AM »
"Ahh" Kei sighed to herself as she reached the parking lot. Play rehersals were the same as always. She just wanted them to be over. She wanted to get to the actual performance.
Something caught Kei's eye as she continued walking.
Two chairs sat infront of her.
Her two chairs to be excact.
Kei could feel something resembling an anxiety attack coming on as she dared to move her eyes upward in the general direction of her room.

It did not take long for Kei's mind to register what was going on. It took even less time for her brain to communicate with the rest of her body in order to get her up and moving in a mad dash to the door, through the lobby, straight onto the nearest elevator.
She first saw the light coming from her room. She noticed the lit tiki torches and dancing girls at roughly the same time. She realized that what started out as backround noise she attributed to a bustling city, became destictinve chants, voices, and songs as she drew closer.
As mentioned earlier, it was not long before this infromation was processed, examined, and acted upon.

Kei was slightly out of breathe as she crashed into the elevator's interior. She  furiously jabbed at the floor button, wishing the stupid thing would move faster. The dinging on the elevator acted in the same way a gunshot at a marathon does. After hearing it, she took off through the barely open doors.

She saw them. Piles of shoes in the hallway. As she came to a screeching halt infront of her room she realized that light was being emmited in a strange way. She mostly attributed this to the fact that a large portion of her lower wall was missing.
"Argh!" She hissed to herself. She looked at the door.
Bam.Bam.
The sounds silenced the girls gathered inside.
"WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON HERE?!"

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« Reply #425 on: January 07, 2007, 07:25:44 AM »
Time Up
Kei's Room

The girls stood in silence. They all watched Kei. Some with amusement, some with fear, and a small few with absolute shock that she was still a) alive, and b) still in Hello!Pro.
The girls were not the only ones doing the standing. Kei did the same. The only thing that moved was her head. Her feet were firmly planted and her jaw looked as though it had no intention of returning to it's normal position.
Finally, she spoke.
"This is absolutely," She swallowed, composing herself."it."

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« Reply #426 on: January 07, 2007, 07:47:33 AM »
All Kei could do was stand there, and take in the situation.
She first noticed Miki and her close friend Jack. Miki's upper body was quite visible through a quite large hole in the wall. In her hand was a bottle of Jack Daniels which was en route to Miki's mouth. Next she noticed the floor. Her once lovely, clean floor that was now covered in sand. After that the van seats, the counter tops, the chairs, all of which had their fair share of sand as well. Her attention then shifted to her dining room table which was now at a slant. Finally, the words came to her.
"This is absolutely," She swallowed, composing herself."it."

The girls still didn't respond.
"I know I don't need to ask, but which one of you was it."
Kei's eyes immediately went to Mari, while everyone elses' scattered, avoiding eye contact.
"This is just too much."
She took a step into the room.
"You destroyed my room.And" She paused."my table."
She looked at Yuuko and Mai.
"Is that the leg of my table your using as a limbo stick? My table? The beautiful table that I once ate my meals at?"
Yuuko looked down at her hand and then slowly put it behind her back.
"Kei" Mari began.
"No. No, I've had enough."
Mari looked at her friend, and fellow generation member.
"If you want to do this. if you want to play these games..."
She wiped a tear from her eye.
"Then this...This is"
She looked up from the floor.
"WAR!"
Mari jumped back. She huffed.
"War? War, you say."
"You heard me."
"Kei, I want you to think about this. Don't do anything rash. You certainly wouldn't want to do something you'd regret."
"Ohh this is getting good." Miki whispered like a giddy little school girl. Yuuko nodded feverishly in agreement.
"The only one that will regret something is you, pipsqueak."
"I'll admit Kei, you almost had me going there for a second. The dramatic speech, the tears,-"
"I'm in theatre for a reason" Kei interrupted.
"Becasue you can't get a job anywhere else" Mari finished. "You know," She continued. " Normally I would storm out of here, but considering, I would find it completely ridiculous for me to leave a damn good party."
"Likewise" Kei agreed. "The damage is already done. We might as well just finish off the evening on civil terms."
Tsuji looked at Mari.
Mari nodded.
Tsuji looked at Kei.
Kei nodded.
"I do have one request though" Kei said.
"And what would that be?" Mari asked.
"Do you think we can lose the torches? It seems like one really big accident waiting to happen. Quite the fire hazzard."
"It adds atmosphere." Mari said.
"Yes, and I agree that it does, but in the past three minutes Makoto has bumped into that one seven times."
The girls turned their attention to Makoto.
"Like hell I 'bave. I'll bbeat you up. Let 'be at 'er."*
Mari turned back to Kei.
"Okay, we'll lose the torches.

*based on recording of Rika, Makoto, and maybe Tsuji and Konno talking about how Makoto is a violent drunk.

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« Reply #427 on: January 07, 2007, 08:40:09 AM »
@ferrar- Thank you very much.

@glcorps2002 explosions are a gaurenteed win, pretty much without exception.

@JFC You too? She always looked like there was something going on there.

@rnd- Thanks. You'll have to wait and see about Yui.

@OS- How could you miss Miki? It's Miki. Miki. Ah, I'm a Miki fan all the way so she ocasionally gets brought up in one way or another wheter I intend for it to happen or not.

@tanachan- The hurt is forthcoming. Like I said before, it is all set up.

@HB- The party was just more of a set up. Sorry if I had some of you expecting another Kana. The party starts a chain of events though.

@Mikan- Thank you.
Angst. I never thought it would be used to describe something I wrote. I guess I was just trying to broaden the story a bit. You don't always have good times right? I mentioned I wanted to have parts like that, happiness, saddness, all that stuff, just like a 'normal' day migth have. So I guess that is where it came from.

After I read your message, I had to think, "Am I the funny kid?" I reflected on it for sometime. I wouldn't consider myself funny, but the things I do or say  get laughs. So I suppose that would answer the question? Yes. I guess I could be labeled as that. My comments come out. It has always been this way. Actions wise, it is the same. I suppose I have always been known for my big showings. I was blessed enough to never have really given much of a damn about what people have thought. Because of that I fully commit myself to whatever it is I am doing. Even if you are going to look stupid doing something, isn't it better to still give it 100% instead of half assing it and looking worse? That has always been my thought process. At the same time, I think moderation is important. The over the top displays have their place. They happen once in a while if the mood is right. The rest of the time however, a sarcastic comment is pretty much gaurenteed. For instance,
My father came home and saw me folding a blanket,
"What are you doing?"
"I'm building a flotation device. What does it look like I'm doing?"
Stuff like that, it happens.

Biyuuden. I don't really like them. I wonder where you got that idea from? Haha. I just put them in the story. It is part of my attempt to include a wide variety of girls. To be honest, and I am telling you this is the truth. A while ago I realized(see:read her signature) that rnd, quite the faithful reader,  had a thing for Biyuuden, and I was just like "oh, I'll put them in." I just try and add a little bit of everything so hopefully there is something for everybody. Because sometimes, people could write something, but if you don't like the charecters, you are less inclined to read it right? So it worked out that by putting it in there for rnd, I was covering my bases. So truthfully that's where the increase of Biyuuden came from.

@Arma - I suppose it does kind of take a life of its own. I really don't have a plan. I just sit down and write. Sometimes the things start to fall into place and then it becomes something that I need to sort of make a general plan for,  like Kana. When that happens it really becomes a feeling of "Oh I want to finish that up" becuase once I do, I get to this place where it could just go anywhere again, and that is exciting. Really the only things that have had any sort of planing have been Kana and the Party. In the case of the party, however, I more had plans of what I wanted to happen after the party, which is where I will pick it up in the next section.

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« Reply #428 on: January 07, 2007, 04:08:08 PM »
Wow. You gave me a long reply there which is great. It was what I was hoping for. Yeah I dont know how I got caught up thinking you like biyuuden. Blame lack of sleep, thats what I say!!

Well I have come to the conclusion that I think you are a funny girl and a very smart one too. I would like to say, if you ever needed something I would be there to back you up and be an ass 100% of the way, yeah baby thats the way to do it!!

Where are these secret recordings? I have only heard about a few, I want more!!! Makoto a violent drunk? Thats so funny 'cause she is such a happy person. I havent been that drunk to get double vision or anything like that. As far as I know Im very apologetic and uh...I like hugging and kissing people. And I laugh alot..So far so good ^^

I could imagine Makoto being angry and bitchy ^^

Awesome chapter as usually. Do you ever get sick of hearing that?

If I can help you in any way, I was serious about what I said before - Just PM me!!

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« Reply #429 on: January 07, 2007, 07:32:30 PM »
Hey! Don't worry, erink!
As far as I know your writing, certainly what you have planned for us in the afterparty is going to be awesome!
As aways... your dialogues are just... marvelous!
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« Reply #430 on: January 07, 2007, 07:56:33 PM »
I'll be patient. Yep. Patient. *twiddles thumbs* *starts whistling* *begins to grind teeth* Paaaatient...






Lol, about the war and people forgetting about Kei.

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« Reply #431 on: January 14, 2007, 05:33:37 AM »
"Well?"
"Well, I'm not going to lie. There isn't really any reason to sugar coat it."
"Just let me know how bad it is."
"I punched the numbers, last night's party,"
"yes?"
"we didn't even make a dent. We would need to have a party every single night and use tiwce as many to see a significant decrease in the numbers of coconuts."
"ahhhh!" Ayaka let out a cry of frustration as she turned her back to the balcony's railing, pressing her back up against it and sliding down to a crouch.
A light breeze blew through Mari's hair, making it sway.
Mari continued looking out at the view.
"I think I just fucking broke my toe."
Mari looked down at Ayaka.
"Pft, no you didn't."
"The good news is, there are other options."
"Ahhh," Ayaka moaned, "this is a complete mess. What am I gonna do?" She still kept her hands on her face.
"What this foot?"
"AHHHHH! Why the hell would you step on it?!?"
"Haha."
"Well,"
"ouchouchouch!"
"we'll just use them as bowls you know? Cut 'em in half."
"OW!"
"Suck it up!"
"Suck this!"
"OW!"
"Guys!"
"Pk?"
"Hell no."
"Pk."
"Ah! AW! OW! AHHHH! THEFACETHEFACE! WATCH THE FACE!!"
Mari cleared her throat.
Ayaka looked up.
"I'll buy you lunch if you can get ten touches on it."
"Lunch?"
"OW!"
"Deal."
"Ah Ah! They're coming from all angles!"
Ayaka stood up and looked at Mari.
"Like I was saying" Mari began.
"The roll isn't too good."
"Really? You don't say. IDIOT. They aren't perfectly circular, of course it doesn't roll smoothly."
"The girls are trying a little get to gether practice using them." Mari gestured with her eyes over the balcony.
Ayaka looked at Mari and then over the railing.
Below them were the girls of Gatas and a net.
Tsuji was curled up in a ball on the ground in the net, coconuts piled up around her and more making there way over. Mai was hopping up and down on one foot, grabbing on the other one yelling 'Ow!".  Korenaga was standing in the middle of it all with a look that just screamed "What did I ever do?" Yossie was talking to Miki.
"Hey, coconut." She put her arms up near her face in a universal "toss it to me" gesture.
"Get it yourself. My arms feel like they are trying to rip themselves off my body. I'm not tossing anything."
"Sledge hammer." Shibata said.
"Huh?" Miki asked.
"Last night, when you were using the sledge hammer. That's why they hurt."
"Ahh, good. I thought I did something-"
"Unbelievably stupid?" Yossie finished.
"Yeaahhh."
Mari looked at Ayaka.
"I don't know. I only did tryouts and stuff, and I'm not knowledgeable about it but, ah I'm geussing that  this one's not gonna work out to good."
"Yeah, I figured."
"Well, worth a try."
"Anything is at this point."
« Last Edit: January 14, 2007, 06:12:19 AM by erink »

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« Reply #432 on: January 14, 2007, 10:30:47 PM »
I had to read it twice to figure out all the dialogue, but it was more than worth it!  Hella hilarious!  Maybe Gatas should wear steel toe shoes.  Poor Tsuji though, nothing to help her much, except maybe a police riot shield!  Well, either they'll find something else to do with all the coconuts, or they'll be having many more parties!  Drunken coconut bowling, anyone?  :MKgroovin:

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« Reply #433 on: January 15, 2007, 09:26:30 AM »
It must be just me because I have no idea what just happened...

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« Reply #434 on: January 15, 2007, 10:09:38 AM »
Simple: Ayaka has a lovely bunch of coconuts. She just has too many to know what to do with.

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« Reply #435 on: January 15, 2007, 04:09:39 PM »
In the previous one, Mari and Ayaka were outside on a balcony, and the Gatas girls were practicing below them. Inbetween Mari and Ayaka's conversation the other girls could be heard. It made the diaglouge a tad confusing so here it is in edited form.

"Well?"
"Well, I'm not going to lie. There isn't really any reason to sugar coat it."
"Just let me know how bad it is."
"I punched the numbers, last night's party,"
"yes?"
"we didn't even make a dent. We would need to have a party every single night and use tiwce as many to see a significant decrease in the numbers of coconuts."
"ahhhh!" Ayaka let out a cry of frustration as she turned her back to the balcony's railing, pressing her back up against it and sliding down to a crouch.
A light breeze blew through Mari's hair, making it sway.
Mari continued looking out at the view.
                                                           
"I think I just fucking broke my toe."

Mari looked down at Ayaka.
 
"Pft, no you didn't."

"The good news is, there are other options."
"Ahhh," Ayaka moaned, "this is a complete mess. What am I gonna do?" She still kept her hands on her face.

"What this foot?"
"AHHHHH! Why the hell would you step on it?!?"
"Haha."


"Well,"

"ouchouchouch!"

"we'll just use them as bowls you know? Cut 'em in half."
                                                         
"OW!"
"Suck it up!"
"Suck this!"
"OW!"
"Guys!"
"Pk?"
"Hell no."
"Pk."
"Ah! AW! OW! AHHHH! THEFACETHEFACE! WATCH THE FACE!!"


Mari cleared her throat.
Ayaka looked up.

"I'll buy you lunch if you can get ten touches on it."
"Lunch?"
"OW!"
"Deal."
"Ah Ah! They're coming from all angles!"


Ayaka stood up and looked at Mari.
"Like I was saying" Mari began.

"The roll isn't too good."
"Really? You don't say. IDIOT. They aren't perfectly circular, of course it doesn't roll smoothly."  


"The girls are trying a little get to gether practice using them." Mari gestured with her eyes over the balcony.
Ayaka looked at Mari and then over the railing.
Below them were the girls of Gatas and a net.
Tsuji was curled up in a ball on the ground in the net, coconuts piled up around her and more making there way over. Mai was hopping up and down on one foot, grabbing on the other one yelling 'Ow!". Korenaga was standing in the middle of it all with a look that just screamed "What did I ever do?" Yossie was talking to Miki.
"Hey, coconut." She put her arms up near her face in a universal "toss it to me" gesture.
"Get it yourself. My arms feel like they are trying to rip themselves off my body. I'm not tossing anyth ing."
"Sledge hammer." Shibata said.
"Huh?" Miki asked.
"Last night, when you were using the sledge hammer. That's why they hurt."
"Ahh, good. I thought I did  something-"
"Unbelievably stupid?" Yossie finished.
"Yeaahhh."
Mari looked at Ayaka.
"I don't know. I only did tryouts and stuff, and I'm not knowledgeable about it but, ah I'm geussing that this one's not gonna work out to good. Futsal Practice with coconuts is kinda..."
"Yeah, I figured."
"Well, worth a try."
"Anything is at this point."
« Last Edit: January 16, 2007, 02:56:19 AM by erink »

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« Reply #436 on: January 15, 2007, 05:08:42 PM »
Oooooooooooooooooooooohh!! now it makes sense!!! Ty!! your so wise!!

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« Reply #437 on: January 15, 2007, 08:49:58 PM »
Quote from: glcorps2002;283424
Simple: Ayaka has a lovely bunch of coconuts. She just has too many to know what to do with.
Dude, I love the way you worded that. :thumbsup

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« Reply #438 on: January 16, 2007, 02:14:36 AM »
OMG! I always kmew Rika and Miki were together!!! <3 Dark side is sorta hot :D

HOLY crap! I thought Kei was serious XD I was waiting for a war... oh well, it was a good fool.

LAtest chapter, I think I get, it, but but the last 5 lines kinda lost me again, oh well.

Man, I missed a lot >.> Yay for miki man. She's hot.

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« Reply #439 on: January 16, 2007, 02:57:31 AM »
@ OS Just in case there was confusion:The Kei and Mari war is forthcoming.

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