Author Topic: sayumi's fan fic from LiveJournal (Read 9550 times)

mikitty · « **on:** June 03, 2005, 01:31:18 AM »

yeh i know its been posted >_< when will the guy do a new chapter? i think im addicted to it. the thing is though, its not even that explict, it's just good and interesting writing.

http://www.livejournal.com/users/sayumi/

Thimas X · « **Reply #1 on:** June 03, 2005, 04:12:18 AM »

Thats bs.

elgie · « **Reply #2 on:** June 03, 2005, 11:03:34 AM »

it's not that a good writing...

even I could do it better.

shirenuファクトリー · « **Reply #3 on:** June 03, 2005, 11:50:46 AM »

It's not that good writing, but she's the only one to start writing a long, never-ending fic like that, including pretty much all Momusu members... She deserves respect. It's fun reading it, too.

Bonus points for sort of pimping Maki and Nacchi together. Oh gosh. I need NacchiMaki slash.

mikitty · « **Reply #4 on:** June 03, 2005, 12:10:08 PM »

i find it fun

elgie · « **Reply #5 on:** June 03, 2005, 03:06:59 PM »

fun... but, kinda unconsistent. Too many commas. Lots of storylines but they don't lead anywhere. Again too many commas (really, that bugs me a lot, esp. combined with the poor writting skills). A too childish feeling. It looks more like an experiment "hey let's place this and this couple and see what happens", so that people wow "yeah Maki-Nacchi how original!".

But anyway, I'm a harsh critic.

speaking of wandering storylines, I guess I should keep on with my own business

shirenuファクトリー · « **Reply #6 on:** June 03, 2005, 03:16:09 PM »

:| Ooooooooooooookay.

TheQuickening · « **Reply #7 on:** June 03, 2005, 04:44:10 PM »

I've been following this fanfic too. The writer is a university student, I think. So he/she may just be taking a break for a vacation. Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon...I also wanna find out what happens in the Nacchi/Maki part.

OTN1 · « **Reply #8 on:** December 29, 2005, 06:52:35 PM »

I read a bit of it. it was interesting

Jabronisaur · « **Reply #9 on:** December 30, 2005, 04:24:34 AM »

I though it was kinda cool. I could use the inspiration to get back into my fics. I still gotta finish that Maki/Ayaka thing and my Konno manga. Oh well.

Tuffty · « **Reply #10 on:** December 30, 2005, 02:11:47 PM »

Quote from: Jabronisaur

I still gotta finish that Maki/Ayaka thing and my Konno manga.

Yes. Yes you certainly do.

bluekinoko · « **Reply #11 on:** June 05, 2006, 09:11:37 AM »

The Sayumi thing was good. The writing wasnt great I will admit but atleast she put a lot of effort into it and wrote some pretty cool things.

btw, the writer is a girl

(me? Im a Miki/Aya fan..lol thats probably the only thing that I thought the fic could have needed. A bit more of them but I was happy with that last chapter I read baout the kinky dream)

cchen · « **Reply #12 on:** June 06, 2006, 05:29:59 AM »

The words are kinda hard to read xD
There isn't any space between, where's paragraph T_T
Anyways, keep up the good job ~

sugar · « **Reply #13 on:** July 08, 2006, 01:23:39 PM »

Wow thanks guys! I didnt realize i'd already been pimped on here!
And yeah, thanks for the criticizm, seriously. My writing isn't very good but I am just starting up, hopefully it will become better and I can impress you all!
(P.S: I'm a year 12 high school student)

Elle_Driver · « **Reply #14 on:** July 08, 2006, 09:39:48 PM »

I enjoyed reading that fic. "In my dreams volume 1" was good as well.

I hope Aya will have another kinky dream soon. Or it could be Miki's turn next time.

Sorry for being so ecchi.

sugar · « **Reply #15 on:** July 09, 2006, 01:03:14 AM »

No need to be sorry, why do you think I wrote the fic in the first place?

Elle_Driver · « **Reply #16 on:** July 09, 2006, 02:18:18 AM »

True!

So...will there be another dream soon?

By the way I like how Miki teases Rika in your fic.

sugar · « **Reply #17 on:** July 09, 2006, 09:07:59 AM »

Aw thanks, and yes, I am currently in process of writing a new dream session, a new diary entry and a new chapter, AND an introduction chapter for my friends who are reading it and have no idea who any of the girls are ^^.

Elle_Driver · « **Reply #18 on:** July 09, 2006, 01:41:20 PM »

Yay, good news! Can't wait to read your new stuff.

Mikan · « **Reply #19 on:** July 16, 2006, 07:47:55 AM »

In my dreams is so hot! I cant wait for the next part.
It took me 2 days to read start to finish and re-read some chapters that I had forgotten. In total I think I spent maybe ...12 hours on that site. Yes, I know thats only one day but I needed to sleep and work!