Author Topic: Eri Kamei vs. Morning Musume (Read 85633 times)

jafeijai · « **Reply #40 on:** October 25, 2006, 12:55:11 AM »

OMG...THE PLANE'S FALLING!! OUR IDOLS ARE GONNA CRASH ON A DESERTED ISLAND AND POSSIBLY NOT SURVIVE!!! EVERYONE RUN IN CIRCLES NOW!!! [RUNS IN CIRCLES]

moving on from caps lock ranting..you just HAD to emphasize that part of "cockpit", didn't you?

awaiting the next installment of the story

meowchi · « **Reply #41 on:** October 25, 2006, 01:04:47 AM »

^ Actually I can't write the word c.o.c.k on my blackberry cause it filters it out

the atmosphere is suspenseful (hence when i say it has a BR atmosphere), but everyone is NOT out to kill one another! there is no senseless killing (as i dont see a good point out of that), but, and i emphasize that; but, there IS a killer, so there is going to be killing, in a mystery-genre tale. so~ this isn't a lame BR rip off

theres a climax too! and no the killer isn't gonna end up being someone lame random-not-in-the-story-till-the-end person, like " oh it's atsuko and sharon q! and they flew out to this island to kill everyone! ". lame!

hint: the kiler is already mentioned in the story!

but why the eri kamei vs morning musume title? well.. you'll find out

jafeijai · « **Reply #42 on:** October 25, 2006, 01:14:46 AM »

Quote from: .:meowchi:.

hint: the kiler is already mentioned in the story!

OMG....COULD IT BE....??? [insert suspenseful music here]
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[stop the music here] THE SNEEZING PANDA??!?!?!!??! XDXDXD

meowchi · « **Reply #43 on:** October 25, 2006, 01:16:49 AM »

^ LMAO GOOD IDEA!!! A sneezing killing panda bear, thats freaking awesome!

cant be in this story though, cause this story is based off of realism... damn!

rndmnwierd · « **Reply #44 on:** October 25, 2006, 01:59:14 AM »

OMG! WE'RE GONNA DIE! Oh wait, I'm not on the plane. Forgot... *snags some popcorn*

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Hitomi’s eyes widen. “ ...Wha? Is Aibon back? “

*slightly offended(not really)* What's that supposed to mean?

ferrar1 · « **Reply #45 on:** October 25, 2006, 04:21:56 AM »

^ lol i would add ... Wha? Are Aibon & Tsuji controlling the cockpit?

Great mystery fic here, at last somebody proved that Miki is a good leader!! :p

Sukoshi · « **Reply #46 on:** October 25, 2006, 06:35:24 AM »

Holy Moly! That was suspenseful! lol and yet so funny

Okay now I can see what you mean by comedy and mystery all in one !!

Quote from: .:meowchi:.

theres a climax too! and no the killer isn't gonna end up being someone lame random-not-in-the-story-till-the-end person, like " oh it's atsuko and sharon q! and they flew out to this island to kill everyone! ". lame!

Drats! No crazy Tsunku!

but the panda was a good idea! although it's too innocent to kill so good thing you said no to that

now to figure out who rigged the plane...

lil_hamz · « **Reply #47 on:** October 25, 2006, 07:36:39 AM »

How could Yossi sleep through all that racket? She must have been dreaming about Rika

Miki Fujimoto to da rescue!! *rescue rangers music plays in the background*

meowchi · « **Reply #48 on:** October 25, 2006, 11:45:36 PM »

Quote from: Slack;219505

Anyway, Kusumi flailing seemed consistent with her character, but her crying did not. Sure, she cried when that magician was about to "cut off" her hand, but I've never seen her even bat an eyelid from being scolded.

Thanks for the Kusumi input! Actually, Kusumi is more in the means of crying about the plane ride; since she cried about the 'cutting off the hand' incident, I figured she'd pretty much cry in a situation where she would think her life was in danger.

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*slightly offended(not really)* What's that supposed to mean?

Don't take the jokes seriously! It was a joke regarding Aibons *ahem* incident... I'm sure you knew that though!

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^ lol i would add ... Wha? Are Aibon & Tsuji controlling the pit?

Great mystery fic here, at last somebody proved that Miki is a good leader!! :p

Aibon and Tsuji are not in the story, remember it's a MM fanfic only. So no Maki, Rika, Satoda~
And yeah, Miki can kick - bootay when she wants to! Is that bad or good for Kamei? Keep reading to find out!

Quote from: Sukoshi;220834

Holy Moly! That was suspenseful! lol and yet so funny Okay now I can see what you mean by comedy and mystery all in one !!

I'm glad you enjoyed that! Also, I love putting tons of dialogue in the story; gives it some sort of character!

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Miki Fujimoto to da rescue!! *rescue rangers music plays in the background*

What exactly is Miki up to? Who will survive the crash? What's on that damned island below? Stay tuned for the next chapter!

Tanachan · « **Reply #49 on:** October 26, 2006, 01:57:40 AM »

TOO LONG TO WAIT!!!

And imagine if RuRu was controlling the cockpit. With her "Another Day at H!P" crazy personality!

Owaranai_sLaVe · « **Reply #50 on:** October 26, 2006, 04:55:57 AM »

Hmm thank goodness I found a good one to read as my second fanfic ever.

Heheh Yossui sleeping through all that camotion... must be dreaming about YoCharMi (Yossui, Charmy/Rika, Miki)

Anyway, at first I would have thought that it was Yossui as the killer because eri was sooo pissed at Miki, so Eri killed her. And because lately Risa and Eri have been hanging out *and Risa seems like she could ahve a bigger role in this fanfic than Sayu* Yossui killed Eri for revenge. Why? Because of YoMiki baby!~

Then I thought... of the "Aibon is back" from Yossui... and now I think Aibon IS back and BAM BAM BAM... out to kill MoMusu.

-Owaranai_sLaVe

cheesesticks · « **Reply #51 on:** October 26, 2006, 05:09:36 AM »

Quote from: .:meowchi:.;220604

hint: the killer is already mentioned in the story!

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Hitomi’s eyes widen. “ ...Wha? Is Aibon back? “

There we go!

*I only wish I knew. I suck at mysteries D:*

DO Me DO Me · « **Reply #52 on:** October 26, 2006, 05:46:10 AM »

ooh interesting, is there a reason why some words are in bold or is it just for emphasis?

meowchi · « **Reply #53 on:** October 27, 2006, 12:07:12 AM »

BGM: Risa's Theme (6.72 MB)

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Ai Takahashi
Flight 707
October 8, 11:57 AM

Thick smoke quickly engulfs the cabin.
The toxic fumes made it hard to breath.
Hard to see.

With Hitomi gone, in search of Miki, Ai felt nauseous as she sat between Reina and Risa. All three desperately held hands.
“ Ai? “ Risa tightened her grip. “ Ai, My eyes burn… “

“ Just, “ Ai didn’t know what to say. “ Just close them, okay? We’ll be out soon. “
“ Promise? “ Risa let go, and slowly held out her pinky.
Ai paused. “ …Musume’s honor. “ They both smile as Ai grasps Risa’s pinky with her own.
“ Don’t let go. “ Ai said.

Time passes.
Seconds seemed like hours.
No sign of Miki.
Or Hitomi.

Ai peers at Reina, who suddenly loosened her grip.
Ai gasps. Like a flimsy doll, Reina’s upper torso plummets to her knees.

Reina… Reina passed out.

Ai cringed. She was powerless to help her. She could only wait. Wait for impact. Ignoring the sudden temperate blast of heat, Ai focuses forward. Beyond the smoke, cowered Kusumi, Eri and Sayumi. Kusumi clutched a bright yellow blanket to her nose.

Lucky, Ai thought. Least the fumes aren’t getting to her…
“ Ugh… “ Risa moans. Interrupted in thought, Ai reverts her attention.

“ Still with me Risa? “
“ It’s not that easy… “ Risa responded weakly. “ You? “
Ai paused. “ Once we get out of here, I promise to share my bread with you. “

“ Liar… “ Risa murmured. Her voice trembled. “ You never share that bread with anyone, and besides, “ Her voice trembled. “ you’re crying. “
Risa poked Ai’s cheeks. “ See? Tears. “

Ai quickly replies. “ That’s how much I like that bread. “
“ …Was that a joke? “ Through the deep grey haze, Risa smiled. “ You were always so bad at telling jokes… and interviews… and… “
Ai noticed something different about Risa’s voice. It was different. She was different.

“ Why the past tense talk? “ Ai interrupted. She tried to sound cheerful. “ I’m still gonna tell bad jokes to ya’ll once we get ou- “
Ai coughed violently. She used most of her energy just to talk. There was a pause as the floor shook. Her eyes began to roll back to her head.

Stay awake, Ai. Stay awake.

“ I know it’s corny but, I’ll miss you and your accent… “ Risa laughed softly. “ Ya’ll~… “
“ Don’t. “ Ai said. She could feel her lungs enclave onto themselves.
“ I’m sorry, Ai… “ Risa continued. “ I’m so tired… “
Ai choked. Risa loosens her pinky.
“ D-don’t! “ Ai screamed. She struggles to say more, but nothing comes out. Another blast of heat hits her face.

Unable to keep her eyes open, Ai slowly passes out on Risa’s shoulder.

meowchi · « **Reply #54 on:** October 27, 2006, 12:13:28 AM »

Quote from: DO Me DO Me;221328

ooh interesting, is there a reason why some words are in bold or is it just for emphasis?

For emphasis!

And to the others; Aibon is not in this story...

rndmnwierd · « **Reply #55 on:** October 27, 2006, 02:55:02 AM »

Hmm, smoke was the killer, I see...

TydusArandor · « **Reply #56 on:** October 27, 2006, 03:03:26 AM »

Oh my god, this story is so addictive @_@;;;. We're going into the more suspenseful chapters now, aren't we >_<. Can't wait to see what happens next (but kinda scared to see what will happen next too

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If the killer's already been mentioned, has to be one of them.. does Konkon and Makoto still count here? I remember them being mentioned in some chapter

Yuuyami · « **Reply #57 on:** October 27, 2006, 03:22:04 AM »

Takagaki = <3

Who's in the freaking cockpit? ><~!

Next chapter perhaps?

Nonetheless, write more so that my vast suspicions are confirmed.

lil_hamz · « **Reply #58 on:** October 27, 2006, 02:58:17 PM »

TakaGaki

So sad....sniff...
Poor Reina out cold so early

She missed all the touching moments.

jafeijai · « **Reply #59 on:** October 27, 2006, 05:39:46 PM »

aw...TakaGaki pinky promise

i agree with Yuuyami, write more!!