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« Reply #60 on: December 13, 2006, 07:19:59 PM »
To Mikan's questions:

1 - Not necessarily. Toward the end their will probably be a chapter dedicated to Mikix???. I all ready know who it will be but I dun wanna spoil it!

2 - I plan to have more groups featured later on, but understand that I only got into H!P at the beginning of November/end of October. I still need to look up other groups and such :P

3 - I am HORRIBLE at writing that sort of stuff. Maybe I'll decide to write one or two (or three?) near the end...XD

I told you this one would look happier:


Enjoy :)

 
Gou: Winter Games

Why was it that Reina could never wake up and go through the morning peacefully and properly? Her room would be finished soon, and she could move in with Eri. At least Reina was certain Eri wouldn't jump on the bed at the crack of dawn and yell, "Reina, get up!! We're leaving in forty minutes!"

Reina groaned, grabbing Miki's pillow and throwing it at the agressive prostitute, but only being hit two times harder with the same pillow not too long afterward. "Ughhh...whaddya' want, Fujimoto?"

"You've gotta get up! You're gonna lag if you don't start getting ready,"

"Gedeadyfowad?" Reina slurred out, sitting up in the bed and rubbing the sleep out of her eyes.

"It'll be a two hour drive so you can sleep on the way." At that, Miki shut the door behind her and left a very confused Reina to stare at the brown wood. She grumbled again and again as she fell out of the bed, and internally screamed, in need of more sleep. What time was it anyway?

Looking at the clock on the night stand next to her bed, she started a morning fit: throwing pillows at the walls, thrashing the blankets and sheets on to the floors and kicking everything in sight. Why was she awake at six o'clock?

After taking her anger out on her bedroom, she trudged into the bathroom and made herself up before yawning as she walked out of the bedroom.

"Ready, Tanakacchi?" Rika asked with a smile. What a sight she was for sore eyes...waking up to Miki, after all, was never a pleasant thing.

"Ohayou, Rika-sam-" Reina interrupted herself as she stared intently at Rika. Well, there was definitely something different about her senpai...but what was it? Rika only seemed to be amused as Reina tried to put her finger on it.

"......I got it! Have you cut your hair?"

Rika grinned happily. "I'm glad to see you've noticed Tanakacchi." Her hair before was dark brown and just a bit above her breasts, but now, though it was the same color, it was mostly cut off, ending just passed her ears, and the color was near a reddish blonde color. The older prostitute now had a more mature look which seemed to fit her personality more, Reina thought.

"It looks great! Now...where exactly are we going?" Reina asked as she was handed an apple by Rika and they made their way down the steps to the living room, and out the door to see a silver van waiting for everyone.

"There's a place that we always go to for the winter season. We'll just spend a day there, but it will be nice anyway. I won't tell you what it's like. It's supposed to be a surprise,"

"Oh...I see...all right, well," Reina yawned again as she crawled in. "As long as I get to sleep on the way then that's fine."

She barely realized Eri squeezed in the corner by the window, smiling shyly at Reina. "Ohayou, Tanaka-san."

"There's no need to be so polite, Eririn," Reina said, plopping down beside her and throwing her head back, closing her eyes. "Just call me Reinana or Tanakacchi."

"All right...Tanakacchi."

"That's better. Now all that's left is some more sleep." Reina yawned once more before resting her head gently on Eri's shoulder, not noticing the blush rising on the other girls' face.

"We're all going to have to squeeze in," Yuko announced as she sat in the drivers' seat. There were two rows of long seats that could fit three people each, maybe four tightly, and a drivers seat and passengers' seat like most vans had. Yuko was driving and Kaori was in the passengers' seat, while Eri, Reina, and Rika sat in the very back seat. Ai, Maki, and Makoto sat in the seat in front of them and all that was left was Miki.

"Damn you all," The vixen growled as she squeezed beside Ai.

"All right, let's go!"

"Wait!" Reina said, shooting her head up. There was another certain vixen missing, after all. "Where's Tsuji-san?"

Everyone cocked an eyebrow at the wonky-eyed prostitute, staring at her as if she just lost her mind. "Eh...Tsuji doesn't come." Kaori answered, trying to be as sincere as possible.

"So, now are we ready?"

"Well, let me get her."

"No!" Everyone shouted in unison.

"Why do you want Tsuji to come, Reinana?" Rika asked curiously.

"Well, we're all friends so why not?" Reina replied, crawling over Rika as she rushed out of the van and into the prostitute's house, running up the stairs and trying her hardest to remember the day she first met Tsuji in the bathroom. She opened and slammed shut every door that she saw, but each was empty, either messy or spotless. When she came to a door at the very end of the hall which contained all of the bedrooms, she was suddenly met with a heavy swoosh of air and a very pissed looking Nono stepping outside of her room.

"What the hell is going on?! Stop causing so much-Tanaka?"

"Are you ready, Nono?"

"R-ready?" Despite her cruel appearance, Nozomi Tsuji was sure easy to surprise.

"We're going to some winter place. You guys go there every year, right?" Reina was trying to be as sincere as possible. Maybe if she was kind, Tsuji wouldn't act so rough toward her.

But still, Tsuji glared at her. "I'm not going." She went to shut the door, but Reina quickly stopped her.

"Please?" She asked, pouting at the older prostitute who twitched several times uncomfortably. "I'd really like it if you'd come. It'll be fun," Reina grinned, seeing that Tsuji was beginning to reconsider.

"Leave me alone, Tanakacchi." And Tsuji instantly realized her mistake. After all, who would call Reina by one of her nicknames unless she was her friend?

"All right! Let's go!" Reina grabbed Tsuji's hand and began running as quickly as she could down the hallway and stairs, until she was outside and trying to squeeze Tsuji in the van.

"Goddamnit, Tanaka, leave me alone! I said I'm not going!" Tsuji complained, putting her hands against the outside of the van, trying to make sure she wasn't at all close to the other women inside.

"Pleaaassee? I really want you to come!" All of the other prostitutes just stared in shock as Reina tried pushing Tsuji into the van.

"Come on, Nono." Rika said, pulling Tsuji into the care beside her. Reina grinned in satisfaction.

"Thanks, Rika-sama!" She crawled in beside her, deciding to sit next to the very pissed Tsuji, no matter how much disdain the older prostitute had for the teen.

About fifteen minutes into the ride, Reina yawned again and stretched in the little space she had. "I'm still tired," Before she probably realized what she was doing, her head was suddenly in Tsuji's lap, leaving Tsuji to yelled, "What the hell are you doing? Get off of me you little brat!" But Reina didn't hear much more, for she fell asleep not long after falling into the bitter woman's lap.



"Get up, you wonky-eyed litte-"

"Be gentle, Tsuji. She probably didn't get much sleep. I bet she's sensitive to that sort of thing."

Tsuji snorted. "She's gonne be sensitive in a minute if she doesn't get off of me. She's lucky I even let her lay on me through this entire ride!"

"Well, we'll just leave waking her up to you, Nono. Come in whenever you two are ready!" Bursts of dog-like laughter sounded, and eventually faded as Reina found herself gaining conciousness again.

"Eh? Nono?" Reina said groggily.

"It's about damned time!" And suddenly Reina's head collided with the car seat as Tsuji squirmed as fast as she could out of the van. Reina pouted as she crawled out soon after.

"Huh? So...this is "the winter place", hm?" The teenager murmured to herself as she observed her surroundings, which was a place with practically no civilization present besides the moderately sized cabin the van was parked beside. Other than that, there was only trees and snow.

"Reinana," Reina twisted her head to a smiling Rika. "You aren't wearing much, I don't want you to get a cold. Come inside...there's hot cocoa!"

Reina's face lit up after hearing that anything close to sweet would be in the cabin, so while grinning, she ran passed Rika and into the room everyone was currently gathered in, which was the kitchen. "Hot chocolate?!" She all but yelled as she plopped down beside Eri, though thoroughly ignoring her, and quickly grabbed the closest cup of coco.

"Geez...don't ever take a breather do you, kid?" Miki said, cocking an annoyed eyebrow at her kouhai.

"Later today," Kaori began in a loud voice, obviously not wanting to hear more bickering from Miki and Reina. "We'll drive out further so you can see the scenery, Reina."

"Eh? Scenery?"

"In a place like this, you do expect to see scenery, don't you?" Makoto said, seeming to get a burst of energy from the idea. "It's gorgeous! Too bad we only get to spend a day."

"We can come up another time," Kaori tried to assure her fellow prostitute.

"Spring is a nice time to come as well," Ai interrupted. "The summer's are too hot, though, definitely."

"It's only nine o' clock. We have until ten o' clock tomorrow, since some of us have appointments. This season sure is busy," Yuko said, gulping down some hot chocolate. "So first of all, what about sleeping arrangements?"

"Make sure the young ones are away from Yuko," Tsuji murmured, staring coldly at her superior.

"Awww...that's not nice, taking all of my fun away from me so soon!"

"Pedafile..."

"Hardly! I'd like to call it a senpai's love," Yuko said jokingly and smirked at the girl sitting next to her.

"Shut the hell up!" It seemed even Tsuji couldn't beat Yuko at a verbal war.

"I think things are tensing up just a bit too much." Rika smiled as she said so. "How about this; Eri and Reina share a room, Maki and Ai with share the room like they usually do, and then Yuko and Mako, and Miki and Kaori and Tusji and I."

"You'll deal with Nono for an entire night?" Miki stated bluntly. "Pfff! I'll be looking forward to see who has the most bruises in the morning."

"I have a feeling this is going to be a less relaxing trip than I first expected," Reina sighed out as she tried to ignore Miki and Tsuji bickering...again.

"Don't worry, Tanakacchi," Rika said kindly. "I'll make sure you enjoy yourself."

Instantly, Reina really wished that Rika hadn't said that. Or more so, that she hadn't reacted like she did to it. Reina was sure Rika noticed her blush, but she was just glad that she couldn't see the far-too-kinky thoughts running through her mind, involving none other than Rika herself.

"Are you all right, Tanakacchi? You weren't out in the snow that long..."

"Fine!" Reina squealed before jumping up, rubbing the back of her neck nervously as she laugh loudly. "Sowho'stoupforscenerygoing? I mean...who's up for going to check out the scenery...or whatever?"

"All ready? We just got here..." Makoto said and looked at Reina with a furrowed brow.

"Day lights burning, let's go!"


"Sugoi! I didn't know there was a place like this in Japan,"

"Thank Yossie. She introduced it to us first. No one's entirely sure how she found it though." Yuko explained as everyone stepped out of the van in their winter wear and into the snow-covered land.

"So what should we do first?" Eri murmured to herself, looking around the pretty much deserted area.

Reina, being the little mischief-maker she is, smirked and picked up two hand fulls of snow and shoved them together. But, just as she was about to through it straight at the back of Eri's head, she instead felt a menacing cold on the back of her neck.

"What the hell?!" The yankee yelled, spinning around to see Miki in a fit of laughter. "You bitch!" Taking advantage of the red-faced, rolling on the ground Miki, Reina threw her snow ball twice as hard.

"Did you seriously just attack the Great Mikitty!" Miki yelled, her face now red with anger rather than laughter.

"Okay, break it up kiddies." Yuko interrupted the fighting pair. "At least apply some rules to the situation."

"....Eh?"

"All right! Kaori and Rika, Eri and Reina, Miki and Maki, Makoto and Ai, and me and Tsuji! Rules are, if you're hit you're out. Winner gets...uhm...free sex!"

"No!!"

"Hmph...fine. Winner gets their own room for the night. Now hurry up and spread out! What? No one has any sense of subtlety anymore?" At that, everyone "paired up" according to Yuko's directions and started going into what Reina hadn't noticed before: A very dark-looking, large forest.

"Eh? Hey, Eririn, let's go!"

"Ah...right." Reina grabbed the shy girls hand as she began running into the forest, again unaware of Eri blushing like she had when Reina laid her head on her shoulder. "Where should we hide?" Eri asked, slowly slipping her hand out of Reina's. The last thing she needed was to tear herself up inside just because she was holding someone's hand.

"Over there!" Reina whispered and grabbed Eri's hand yet again and ran toward a row of four trees closely near each other. She was sure no one would see them there.

"Uhmm..."

"What is it?"

"Well...why are we so close to each other?" Eri murmured shyly, making sure she made absolutely no eye contact with her fellow prostitute.

"Do you want to get caught?" Reina replied as if it were the most obvious thing in the world. "Well I don't, so-" Suddenly, a loud scream sounded through the snowy forest, interrupting Reina.

"What the-"

"Ha! I found them!"

"You dipshit! You just blew our-"

Reina picked up as much snow as she could (as quickly as she could) and threw it without reluctance at the expecting pair made of Miki and Maki.

"Damn it all..." Miki grumbled as she followed Maki out of the forest, where Reina saw Makoto and Ai leaning against the silver van.

"All right, let's go over there." For the next five minutes, Reina made sure that she and Eri moved quietly in the forest so that they weren't spotted by any more competetors. Now, both teenaged girls were leaning against a tree. Or more so Reina was pressing herself a little to closely against Eri on said tree.

"Reina..." Eri whined, clearly uncomfortable due to their current position.

"Shh! It's not like I want to be in this freezing forest either,"

"That's not it-"

"What was that?"

"What was what?"

"I think I just heard something...we have to be qui-" Reina froze as she now noticed exactly how close she was to the shy girl she was unpleasantly (or pleasantly, however you look at it) leaning against. Not only was there less than an inch of space seperating their bodies, but their faces were so close their noses were all ready touching...

"Uhmm...Reina..."

..even considering how awkward the situation was, Reina found that she couldn't move a single muscle, and it wasn't because she didn't want to "blow their cover".

Why?

"Is something wrong Reina?"

Why can't I look away from you? Your eyes are very pretty...maybe that's why.

"Maybe we should get out of this forest. Do you think you're starting to get sick?"

Either way, I can't even get close to willing myself further from you.

"Uhmm...we should definitely go. Are you feeling faint? You're leaning in...."

Your lips are nice too...maybe I could just try them once...just on-

"Aha! Caught in the act! Ooooh...and an act that is too. Do you have a camera, Nono?"

"Damn you, Yuko!" Reina growled, crossing her arms and glaring at her superior coldly. Yuko simply laughed in return.

"We can save you the pain of throwing snow balls and just leave now,"

"Hmph! Fine."
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The next chapter will take place during the night they spend there.

Teasers:

"I thought it would make you happy, Reina, so I did it,"

"Reina was ready to grab that sweet ass!"

"Makoto has always admired Hitomi, whether Yossie recognizes her in return or not."

Thanks for all of the reviews guys :bowing: Love you all!
« Last Edit: December 19, 2006, 07:21:22 PM by raspberrygashes »
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« Reply #61 on: December 13, 2006, 09:24:33 PM »
congrats on getting Fic of the Month, so it made me check out your story. Pretty funny and interesting job the girls have, even though we haven't really read about them "working" yet :lol:

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« Reply #62 on: December 13, 2006, 09:51:38 PM »
awesome update! Congrats on fic of the month. You deserve it ^_^. I'm lovin the Reina/Eri action you got goin on. I'm just wondering if it's going to stay that way hmm...

I'm also wondering about why Tsuji is such a bitch...hopefully you'll reveal that later on cuz Im curious

I like how u give us teasers to the next chapter...gets me thinkin

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« Reply #63 on: December 13, 2006, 10:05:58 PM »
Aww! The Reina x Eri is so cute :]

And congradulations on being fic of the month, the first one really since I'm guessing this fic of the month thing is kinda new XD

The teasers imply that someone (Probably Eri or Rika) puts some moves on Reina, and that Reina's probably getting teased on being caught with Eri in a position like that (From this chapter I mean XD which was pretty hawt by the way). Also, we get some words on Makoto's character, yes? Pretty inevitable XD

Anywho, write more~! <3

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« Reply #64 on: December 13, 2006, 11:46:43 PM »
Hey~ congratulations for getting 'Fic of the Month' :cheers :cheers :cheers

Just wondering, do I missed some polls going around?

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« Reply #65 on: December 14, 2006, 01:54:47 AM »
. . . Miki saying "dipshit" at Maki was not as hot as it was hehlarious.

Thanks for a great chapter and congrats on Fic of the month. I haven't been here that long, so I'm guessing this is new as well (am I wrong?)

I really like how you just paired everyone up randomly, it seems like there is no specific reason (except Eri and Reina since they are the newbies). Which is pretty cool, I guess it's much easier if people paired them up like that XD

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« Reply #66 on: December 14, 2006, 06:44:20 AM »
Fic of da month!
Lol, you know Nono loves Reina. And shy little Eri, not realizing what was going to happen. Okay, sleep now...

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« Reply #67 on: December 14, 2006, 07:17:39 AM »
truely deserve the fic of the month!! I LOVE the Reina x Eri pairing!! I was quite suprised at how u made tsuji's character soo fierce tho.. but still it rawks! there HAS to be at least one though/fierce character in there... Great job!

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« Reply #68 on: December 15, 2006, 11:17:31 AM »
Woah fic of da month! Definitely yours for the taking :)  :tfr9a7wg:
I reread this cuz I kinda forgot the details of the first 2 chapters and I'm really glad I did. It's awesome in every way. I love Eri X Reina like everyone else. Also special mention goes to Rika and Nono's characters. It's nice seeing Rika not as the bitch XD and Tsuji so different. I'm pretty sure she'll warm up to Tanakachi soon right?

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« Reply #69 on: December 15, 2006, 12:31:51 PM »
looooooooooooool love this last one.

Yay a kiss!! that was unexpected...ishh

Read the complete Doki Doki!!

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« Reply #70 on: December 16, 2006, 06:23:48 AM »
:) !!  Reina x Eri!  Love it!

"Reina was ready to grab that sweet ass!" - Holy cow.  There are SO many thoughts running through my mind about that teaser.

And, Congrats on being Fanfic of the Month! ^_^ Can't wait to read more!

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« Reply #71 on: December 19, 2006, 07:16:50 PM »
Don't expect a lot out of this chapter, I had writers' block and just threw a bunch of crap into it...sorry, everyone :sweatdrop:

I'll make the next chapter more eventful :)

On another note, I want to finish PGD around May because I want to start a new story in the summer. I'm not sure how many chapters, but I don't want to drag it out for too long. Maybe 30-40. I think my next story will be more satsfying to me...and readers, hopefully.



Do you know how hard it is to find a mean-looking wintery picture of Tsuji? HARD! So you get to stick with nice Tsuji for now...

Enjoy! :D

Roku: By the Burning Fire

"Hahahahaha! I bet Reina was ready to grab that sweet ass!" Yuko burst into her usual dog-like laughter before filling her mouth again and again with sake. "They both need practice anyway, so-"

"Would you shut up about it all ready?!" Reina yelled through her food-stuffed mouth.

"Still...what were you two doing?" Ai asked curiously as she held a cup of hot chocolate in between her hands. "It's sort of odd..."

"We were just trying to be subtle about the game, as Yuko said earlier. Geez...stop exaggerating everything. It's not like we were about to get it on or anything."

"Get it on? I hope we aren't talking about my two new girls..." All of the womens' (and young womens') heads snapped toward the doorway where Yossie stood with a charming smile spread across her lips.

A loud gasp was heard throughout the small living room and suddenly a very excited Makoto pounced out of her cushioned seat and onto Yossie. "You actually came!"

Hitomi chuckled good-naturedly. "I said I'd try, didn't I?"

"Come, come! Have hot chocolate!"

As Reina watched this scene unravel, her mind couldn't help but fill with strange ideas of why Makoto was so energized at the sight of her pimp, Hitomi Yoshizawa.

"Uhmm...Rika..." Reina whispered, looking at her superior who smiled back at her.

"What is it, Reinana?"

"Is there something going on between Mako-chan and Yo-chan?"

Rika fell silent, cocking an amused eyebrow at Reina. "Hmm...well...let me put it simply like this: Makoto has always admired Hitomi, whether Yossie recognizes her in return or not."

Reina looked away from Rika as a brooding expression crossed her face. She wasn't usually one to think too deeply about other people, but even so...seeing anyone reacting so intimately toward a pimp could make the dumbest knob start thinking.

Soon though, Reina was brought of her deep thoughts by one of her objects of attention. "Speaking of which, how are you two doing?" Hitomi asked with the same charming smile as she walked in with and wrapped either of her arms around Reina and Eri (who were sitting next to each other).

"It's great up here," Reina chimed optimisticly. "How'd you find such a place?"

"Ah...long story...maybe I'll tell you one day though."

"Oh, come on! Just tell her (hiccup) all ready, Yossi!" Yuko shouted, gulping down more sake. "It's not that-"

"Shut it, Nakazawa." Tsuji said coldly as she glared at her senpai.

"Awwww...Nono has a temper temper...(hiccup)."

Tsuji growled and clenched her fist around her glass of sake, her glare only becoming colder.

"Ermm...uh...Tsuji! Eh...help me in the kitchen, please!" Reina all but yelled and grabbed the older prosititutes' hand.

"Wha-?...what do you think you're doing, yanki?"

"Yanki?!"

"Yes...yanki. Now let go of me...I don't want a purple-loving, quick-tempered yanki touching me."

Reina fumed, meeting Tsuji glare. "What the hell is your problem?! It's not like I ever did anything to you, damnit! Why don't you stop being such a bitch for now reason? I can't beli-"

"All right, both of you stop it!" Hitomi scolded her two underlings who only continued to send bitter glances to each other. "You two need to stop acting like a bunch of kids. Now sit down,"

So it seems, Hitomi thought as she took a seat by Makoto and watched as Reina sat across from Tsuji, and the two young women looked away from each other. Even Reina can't warm up to Tsuji...but what should I expect from a yankee like her? She's almost as quick-tempered as Tsuji sometimes...

"What shall we do for our night here?" Kaori asked, almost to herself as a spacey expression crossed her face.

"My plan always works." Yuko said in a sing-song voice, smirking widely.

"No one's screwing you, Yuko." Miki responded bluntly and sipped on her hot chocolate casually.

"We could play another game..." Reina suggested.

"I have an ide-"

"Shut it, Yuko."

"Why don't we just relax for now? Everyone's been so busy lately..." Hitomi mused, sighing out as if she was relieved to just be sitting there.


Reina sighed as she dried dishes which were repeatedly being handed to her by Rika who was standing next to her, as calm as ever...Like she always is... Reina thought, another brooding expression crossing her face. When did she become so easily melancholic?

"I hate to ask you the same question twice," Rika began slowly, easily catching Reina's attention. "But...is there something wrong, Reina?"

"Eh? Why do you ask?"

"You look upset, that's all." Rika said simply, still washing dishes. This reminded Reina oddly of the time she was in the same position with Kaorin...

"Ah, I'm just..." Truthfully, Reina wasn't sure how to answer that question. Should she say honestly that she was just feeling down for no specific reason? Or should she lie and say that her senpai was completely wrong?

Deny the whole thing?

"Thank you for making Tsuji come,"

Or dodge the subject?

"Even though...though we don't get on well...I'm thankful."

Rika smiled sweetly as she handed Reina another plate. "I thought it would make you happy, Reina, so I did it."

Reina chuckled. "You make it sound so simple,"

"But it is...I would like to view you as a happy person."

For some unknown reason, Reina was taken aback by that comment, and just stared at Rika while a dripping wet plate still rest comfortably in her hand.

Was I supposed to be expecting that? Maybe I'm just overreacting. I've been rather off lately, after all. But still, any trace of Rika-sama showing some sort of kindess to me, especially when it's unneeded, seems odd to my.

"Reinana," Rika giggled. "Are you that surprised?"

"A-ah, no! I mean, thank you for being so concerned with me, Rika-sama."

"Call me Charmy, no problem."

And charming you are...

"Right, Rika-sa-I mean, Charmy."

"Is everyone ready for bed? It's twelve o' clock!" Kaori shouted into the kitchen. Through her words, though, both Rika and Reina could hear Tsuji and Yuko fighting over who got a room to themself. They were almost as bad as Reina and Tsuji when they fought.

I don't know why...

Reina thought as she sat down on the top bunk, waiting for Eri to come take the bottom.

but I get so upset during the winter. Even though I often think of people as cheerful during this time of year, I feel like I'm a black sheep in the white snow.

Not long after Reina sat, Eri walked in with a shy smile and greeted the yankee.

"What's up, Eririn?"

"Just getting ready for bed..." Eri mumbled as she blushed, taking out a pair of PJ's from her suitcase. "Did you get angry when Rika packed your bag for you?"

"Huh?!"

Things speed up even faster for everyone else, but in the same sense they seem to slow down, as if no one has time for anything anymore.

"Rika packed my suitcase?! I was wondering about that..."

"Yes, she did it while you were sleeping."

And Rika...she has such a dedication to me, for some reason. Would I have expected that? I didn't even think of my parents in that sense, I just always thought of it as their job or something, but it seems Rika does it from her heart...or am I just lying to myself?

"She's something like your mother, isn't she?" Eri asked shyly. She didn't dare look at Reina while she spoke, however.

Reina didn't even mind the somewhat personal questions though. She felt as if Eri was opening up to her just a little bit. "I guess you could say so. She's probably like that with everyone, though. I mean...I don't feel that special.

Do I really want attention that badly? Am I really so desperate for love?

"Even so...she seems to favor you."

"Huh? When did you become so bold?"

"Eh? I'm sorry! Please forgive me...I guess I was just trying to a find a desperate way of starting conversation."

Reina grinned in response and jumped down from her bunk, toppling the bashful Eririn onto the floor and straddled her hips while laughing. "Eri-chan's so shy!"

"Reina, what are you doing?!"


"What are you sighing for?"

"I always sigh before I go to sleep."

Rika closed her eyes, though she felt sleep was so far away. It was true that she always sighed before she went to sleep, but that was far from the truth at the moment. She wished she didn't feel so upset...usually she wasn't so affected by someone else's well-being, however when it came to Reina, everything was somehow different.

She was probably just angry at Tsuji still, though she thanked me for bringing her along anyway. I wish she wasn't so grateful.

"What are you thinking about? I know you're not asleep."

"How do you known I'm thinking at all?"

Tsuji scoffed. "That's a good question. Maybe I can just tell."

Rika chuckled in return. "Psychic Nono?"

"Pfff! You're so obvious with your feelings...it's almost sickening."

Rika froze at that comment. It was because of Tsuji's usual attitude, though. "Am I really?"

"Well I just said it, didn't I?"

Rika was silent after that. Hearing that, for some odd reason, made her uncomfortable. Maybe it's because I like to be portrayed as a certain person?
Either way, I don't like it. I wish she hadn't said that...it's a lie.


Or maybe I would just like to think that.

"I'm not a fool,"

"Do you honestly think that? Or is it that you feel so uncertain that you're trying to convince not just me, but yourself of that?"

"I always saw you as insightful."

Tsuji snorted. "Hardly..."

Rika let out another sigh before closing her eyes again as she felt sleep approaching her finally.

"Are you going to sleep this time?"


She's always so bold...

"It's just friendly fun, Eririn!" Reina said loudly, hints of enthusiasm present within each syllable.

Why can't I be like that?

"Uh...friendly?" Eri thought as she was stiff under her fellow prostitute, who obviously actually saw it as just "friendly fun".

"Hehe!" Reina giggled. "Are you ticklish?"

Eri gasped as she was met with digits attacking sensitive spots on her stomach.

I want to be like that...

Eri laughed to the point where it was beginning to become painful, and small tears were rolling down her red face. "R-R-Reina! T-Tanakacchi!" She shouted in between laughs. "P-p-p-please, st-stop!"

Reina, after tickling her new friend just a couple mroe times, finally rolled off of Eririn, laughing her head off all the while. "You look so funny when you're laughing Eri!"

"...do I?" Eri said, looking away as yet another blush creeped onto her pale cheeks.

"Aw, don't be so shy!"

Because Reina's an admirable person, and I'm not...

"I think it's time to go to bed," Reina said after letting out a loud yawn. Suddenly, she seemed to have no energy left. "G'night, Eririn!"

I can't help but be jealous.
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Even though I tried using other characters' POV's, I still think it's crap :evil:
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« Reply #72 on: December 20, 2006, 12:54:47 AM »
Awww~! It's not crap~! It's good to experiment with things until you find a particular writing style you like :]

Woo~! Reina and Rika are questioning their feelings~! <3 And apparently, Nono got nicer (Not as bitchy as before that is) :] I can't help but wonder if Eri and Reina are going to end up like Mako and Yossie, seems like a foreshadow, the whole admiration-but-ignored kind of relationship :<

Nonetheless, keep writing~! <3

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« Reply #73 on: December 20, 2006, 04:29:38 AM »
i was wondering where this fic go till i realise it was sticky-ed :D

good writing, good stuff, worth the fic of the month !!!!

But i had trouble reading which thoughts belong to whose, or were they all reina's? maybe it's just me :D

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« Reply #74 on: December 20, 2006, 04:36:54 AM »
Quote from: ferrar1;263243
i was wondering where this fic go till i realise it was sticky-ed :D

good writing, good stuff, worth the fic of the month !!!!

But i had trouble reading which thoughts belong to whose, or were they all reina's? maybe it's just me :D


At first they were Reina's [the ReinaxRika kitchen scene and first ReinaxEri bedroom scene] and then the RikaxTsuji bedroom scene was Rika's thoughts, the second ReinaxEri bedroom scene had Eri's thoughts.

I hope that's not too confusing XD
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« Reply #75 on: December 20, 2006, 07:23:14 AM »
^ Thanks for the explanation, i'll read it thru 1 more time. :D

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« Reply #76 on: December 20, 2006, 05:40:31 PM »
Ah the plot thickens.

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« Reply #77 on: December 23, 2006, 07:43:53 PM »
being the fic of the month surely deservs here!:panda_love:
very nice winter chapter!
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« Reply #78 on: December 26, 2006, 06:52:44 PM »
Eri and Reina now?! That hoe ¬__¬
Just kidding!

I really wanted to see Rika and Reina though :T

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« Reply #79 on: December 27, 2006, 06:32:56 PM »
Yay Eri x Reina!!!! :D It gives me the warm fuzzies :P

And yay a new addiction!!!

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