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EP1: Rain, witch, the End of the World and Summer (NMB48 fic)
« on: September 16, 2015, 03:02:06 PM »
Sorry this is the one I wrote casually and without putting much effort so I am gonna admit, it has some serious OOC cases and probably or certainly it sucks hell.. Sorry and thanks for reading.


Summer, most people said it was the best season of the year. There was a long school break and children could spend their time with their beloved families .Others weren’t actually agreed with the opinion. It was hot and dry, production went low and people wanted to rest more. In my opinion, why bother? Hate it or love it doesn’t make any difference. Life itself is a cycle and the mother Earth revolves in a circle. Thus we have 4 seasons cycle. You could not possibly eliminate summer from the great system. But this summer was kind of weird. It had been raining for 4 straight days here in Tokyo and I did not remember seeing the Sun.  Something went wrong for the mother Earth I assumed and the world was going to end, I remembered what an old fortune teller told me every time I walked past her on Koenji sidewalk. Of course I did not care much. Let alone the world ended.

 “Hey, could you smell the rain?” She asked. It was raining like mad outside and the temperature was gradually decreased but I was not feeling cold. Her smooth small hands ran on my bare back, caressing it. Her soft full breasts were pressed onto my stomach and I could feel her warm breath as she put her head slightly under mine. She cupped my chin with her left hand and stared at me with her beautiful well-shaped brown eyes.

“Is it matter?” Looking out of the half-opened glass window, there was a hint that it was raining cats and dogs outside. The sound of rain drumming on the window and it created almost a sad feeling inside of me. To start off with, I was not fond of rain. Did rain actually produce a smell? Now that raised a question. Sniffing, I concentrated, searching for one particular smell. “No, I could smell nothing.”

She was about to say something but she decided to against it. Silence filled the room for good twenty seconds. “Do you love me?” She sat on the right end of the bed near a night table and poured herself a glass of water. She stared at it and her gaze did not move a fraction almost like she was studying the molecule of the crystal clear water under a microscope. Such concentration did exist.

“No.”

“So why did we even…”

“Yuri, you know that I only love Rina. She’s everything that is good in my life, she’s my life. I can’t...love you the same way I love Rina. I’ve got a life with her. Don’t make it hard for both of us.” I cut her words short.

Picking up her pale blue dress that was scattered on the floor and a towel, she walked slowly into the toilet. I could hear soft sobs and yet I could do nothing to stop them. Let her cry. I was saying the fact, I was not lying. It was true that I did not love her but why I ended up being in this hotel room, spending an intense night on a bed with a woman I did not love? I always asked myself this same simple question. It was a question that I would not bother to answer.


And I guess you guys already knew the fact, English isn't my first language (it is my 3rd? Something like that) That isn't an excuse tho, I'm here to learn stuff so yoroshiku!
« Last Edit: September 28, 2015, 04:37:31 PM by teru_fi »

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #1 on: September 16, 2015, 05:10:58 PM »
Yuri and Rina........... Are they Ota Yuuri and Kondo Rina? It's interesting. I wonder who was the "I" though.

And your English is pretty good! Can't wait to read more fics.
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« Reply #2 on: September 16, 2015, 05:47:40 PM »
@Yuki88 thanks for your nice words. Obviously mine isn't as good as yours but I'll work on it.
As for the characters, congratulations, you got those 2. 'I' will be revealed in my next updates.

The characters I created out of nowhere and I just put members' names so that I could post my fic here. For that, I'm really sorry.

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« Reply #3 on: September 16, 2015, 06:59:10 PM »
Don't worry about that, I did that sometimes when I had the idea for the plot haha. Can't wait!
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Re: Untitled
« Reply #4 on: September 16, 2015, 11:59:45 PM »
Poor Yuuri. :depressed:

MORE :mon zoom:


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君を見つけたらどんな言葉を掛ければいい?その姿 見とれて僕はきっと立ち尽くす人混みと喧噪の隙間愛する人と出逢えたことだけでしあわせになる

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« Reply #5 on: September 17, 2015, 12:14:23 AM »
nice, a rare pair :on GJ:

could  it be the "I" is maachun :dunno:

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Re: Untitled: CH1.2 Rain, the End of the World and Summer (NMB48 fic)
« Reply #6 on: September 17, 2015, 02:19:50 PM »
@ChibiRine Thanks for spending your time reading my lame fic.
@bunny_rabbit I don't know why people here are all geniuses.

So here is the next part (another short update)



Last night was wild. Yuri and I decided to go for a drink at a fancy French restaurant. It was not something I decided for an instant but she insisted me to join her, as a celebration for her promotion. I could not say no. To be precise, why should I? Then she wanted to have a chit-chat over the job. We sat at our reserved table and skimmed through the menu. Yuri ordered the finest red wine, grilled salmon and desserts and I ordered the same minus desserts. We were drunk and the rest was history. Yuri always said that she loved me dearly right the moment we first met.

We were working on a same company for three years before I resigned from the job. Our first meeting was not a good one. I would like not to remember a thing about the memory. She is the daughter of our boss, information technology (IT) genius. She is his only daughter. Of course that made she felt like she was a spoiled kid in the family, a brat is the term used in society.  She acted like one to be honest but a thought then hit you, how it was going to feel to have such a girl in your life? She would add tons of fun and colors to your dull colorless life. So I tried to be close to her, tried to take a liking to her. It was an easy job when your target was a lonely young lady. You went out there, tried a few pick up lines you learned from internet and she will be holding your hand as both of you walked into a love hotel room. But things changed when I met Rina. She immediately became a purpose of my whole life. Her existence was crucial, as important as air that I breathe in. For that I was glad I met her.

   Yuri came out after ten minutes. I was a little worried as she wore her expressionless face and I knew the condition was not good. Trying to comfort her would not do any good either. Without even looking at me, “Send me to the station. I’m worn-out.” She commanded.

   “If you’re really tired I can send you to your home, there is no need for you to go the station. Is it okay? At least that is something I can do for you.” I said. I had got plenty of time today. It was my day off. Rina was out with the children to her parents’ home at Osaka for a week. I was planning to give them a little visit and picked them up this evening. Rina’s parents asked them to stay there for a couple more days but I said no, they could not. Her parents asked why and I simply stated that I started to miss my family.

   With a dejected look, Yuri gave up on the question and she followed me quietly to the hotel exit. In the hotel hallway, I saw a couple chatting in front of their room. Their words weren’t all that clear but I could hear something like, my first time, school and parents. These kids must have skipped school and went here instead of spending time in class like their peers did. And these kids devoted their lives for love, to love. They thought they knew everything about love yet they absolutely knew nothing and they thought love was the most important thing in this world. They were wrong. I had such a belief and reality rapidly sunk in. There was no saving in reality and someone you love will not pull you up, no one will save you. When you lost in love games you just need to be ready to face the sorrow.

   I went to the hotel reception to return the key, a woman probably in her late 40s was standing there and she put out a box of Camel, put a cigarette between her lips and lit it up. “How was it?”

   “How was it?” I seconded.

   “You know… the action and stuff...” A silly smile crept onto her face.

   Nodding, “Good I guess. Sorry, I need to go...she doesn’t love waiting.” I tried to say no more. Yuri would not want me or anyone else to talk about our relationship. It was more like a dirty little secret for both of us. The secret was a fabrication of something bigger, something dirtier than the relationship itself. It was big enough to lead to my destruction. Maybe Yuri did not feel the same way but I’d always fear the power her father had. If one day he decided to erase me off literally, nothing would stand in his way.

Yuri’s father was known for his seriousness and he had abnormal, peculiar obsession in politics. Hence he ran as a candidate for the parliament seat after his father (Yuri’s grandfather) died of heart disease. He and his deceased father had this lunatic dream of conquering information society in Japan though it meant they will need to eliminate their rivals. Unfortunately, the dream was somewhat working fine. I had been told that his influence was enormous.  He gained more power. He started to abandon his family, neglect his responsibility as father for Yuri. Maybe there was a time when he forgot the fact that he has a family. Yuri didn’t show like she cared much but deep inside, she was hurt, severely and mercilessly. She lost all connection towards the outside world. She became an addict, an attention addict. All she wanted was for his father to pay attention of her well-being. Sometimes, I felt sorry but there was nothing I could do to help her.

“With my soul! I want to sing with you. Together♪” Yuri and I were kind of startled.

“Is it your phone, producing what must I say… that terrible ringtone?” Yuri stopped right next to my white Toyota MR2 and her face showed her curiosity about the call.

Yes. Sorry. Can I take this call? It’s probably important.” I took the phone out from my chest pocket and opened up the lock screen to answer the call. It was Rina at the other end of the conversation and I did not expect that she would call me at this time. Not that I did not like it but it was just out of the ordinary.
 
“Good morning! A very good morning! Did I wake you up?  Sorry! It was just Naami. She really wanted to talk to you and excited to meet you. She’s literally counting days. I told her that she could talk with you tomorrow but she didn’t bother. She’s kind of stubborn just like you. It is fun here but I missed you. Uh anyways, how are you today?” Her voice hinted no problem. It was just her natural cheerful voice. She’d probably happy to talk to me.

“Oh, fine as always. I spent the week reading and stuff. For foods, I was out for meals at McDonalds and sometimes I prepared quick food, real simple nothing fancy. I got really hungry since my chef isn’t home. Wonder if she went for another job at other restaurants (which I swear to God I’ll kill myself if it happened to me). I need to make her come back to my place. ” I tried to crack a joke.

“No you silly. I know that I’m a better cook and you will starve without me. I’ll never leave your so called restaurant.” Rina was laughing hard. I always adored the way she laughs. She never faked her laughter and her smile. And I liked her cute pout the best.

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Re: Untitled (NMB48 fic)
« Reply #7 on: September 17, 2015, 03:37:46 PM »
So who is this "I" again? :dunno:

Kidding aside, though I feel really sorry for Yuuri. OTL

WIting for the next update! :)


油断した私がハートときめかせたせいねその目に見つめられポーっとしてしまった

君を見つけたらどんな言葉を掛ければいい?その姿 見とれて僕はきっと立ち尽くす人混みと喧噪の隙間愛する人と出逢えたことだけでしあわせになる

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Re: Untitled (NMB48 fic)
« Reply #8 on: September 17, 2015, 04:36:49 PM »
Sorry, it wasn't my intention to leave it hanging, the plot I mean. I am really slow on the writing, probably, this mysterious 'I' wouldn't be revealed until the end of the CH. I've got one more part. Anyway, the confusion like this look good to me LOL 

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Re: Untitled (NMB48 fic)
« Reply #9 on: September 17, 2015, 05:30:40 PM »
whoa whoa whoa... :shock:

MC and Rina are married couple with kids and s/he (?) have a love affair with Yuuri which means they all adult here :dunno:

since Yuuri is still underage please be careful with the scenes and stuffs :bingo:

keep up your good work :on GJ:


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Re: Untitled (NMB48 fic)
« Reply #10 on: September 18, 2015, 01:57:10 AM »
@bunny_rabbit
Yup, they're all grown ups in my fic. I'm not good in writing smut scene so don't worry, there wouldn't be any mature scene thou I can't  promise you that
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« Reply #11 on: September 18, 2015, 05:08:01 PM »
lol...I personally don't mind with mature scene(s), if it can make the story more interesting why not...just be careful with it, especially when underage members--in real--are involved... :bingo:

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« Reply #12 on: September 20, 2015, 04:00:53 PM »
Next part is here (finally)

“So what are the kids doing?” I talked in a small soft voice.

Yuri glanced at me every once in a while. Tired of standing, she decided to sit in the car and turned on the radio, listening to morning news. The rain had stopped.
“Yuzuha is watching her favourite anime with grandma and Nanami is beside me, ready to grab the phone.  She’s eager for a conversation with her beloved papa. Oh, one more thing, it’s her birthday tomorrow and she really hopes that you could take her to the zoo. Let’s not disappoint her okay?”

I was about to say yes but Nanami was first to talk. I could hear her laughter and Rina’s remarks as she scolded Nanami for the interruption.

“Hello papa! I hope you’re here right now. I had so much fun this morning. Grandpa brought me and Yuzu to the river. Guess what? We went fishing, for the first time. We managed to catch many fish. Okay, I lied. We didn’t catch any and we bought fish for lunch from a supermarket. Pretty genius huh?”
“Oh you did? Terrific! That sounds interesting. Papa wish papa was there to buy fish too, not actually fishing.”
I replied. They went fishing. I never went one myself, which it was cool. I was glad my daughters got to do it. So it didn’t rain in Osaka. Somehow that made me felt relieved. The world was not going to end, well at least not today.

“Please papa, don’t tease me. It wasn’t my fault. I felt sorry for the fish. They lived happily in the river. We can’t catch them. “Her voice sounded like she was very sorry.

I quickly turned the event in my mind. Nanami is known for her love for animals especially small ones. I still remember that day when she brought two cute kittens in a cardboard box with her when she was on her way home from school. She cleaned and fed them with care. She asked me and Rina whether she could keep the kittens as pet but I reluctantly said no. Yuzuha was allergic to furs.

Sorry Nanami, we can’t keep them. You know that Yuzu will sneeze when cats get near her right? That’s bad for her health.” I explained, hoping that she would understand the situation. To my surprise she actually did. Two days later, a friend of Rina, a vet came home and picked up the kittens. Nanami was relieved that someone would take a good care of them yet she had this complex face expression. I guessed that she was a little sad. Her kindness didn’t stop there. I remembered the day she had this baby iguana with her. I asked why she took it home and she gave a simple answer, a friend told her to pet it during the semester break. Rina screamed when Nanami showed that little green creature and chased her around the house. She did almost smash it flat using a dustbin cover and before things got out of hand, I told her to keep the iguana in an aquarium and sneaked it into the store.

“You can keep the iguana until the end of the month but don’t let mom see it. No, don’t let her know. Tell her that we’ve already get rid of it. This is our little secret.” I stated.

“You don’t always act like this but today you’re the best papa ever! I love you.” She kissed me on my left cheek. A bright huge smile was plastered across her cute face.

“Just today? Did I do you guys wrong before?

“Yup!”


“Seriously?” I groaned.

“Joke! I was joking.”

“Hey! I’m your only papa. Of course I’m the best!”

So much of a daydream and I didn’t realized that it was raining heavily again. What was wrong with the weather? Were the Gods being indecisive? My shirt was soaking wet and I saw Yuri made a hand gesture -get into the car now. I got into the driver seat as fast as lightning.  I was still with the phone. “You are such an idiot. Why you need to stand in the rain? You may catch a cold later.” She gave me a white t-shirt which she picked up from the back seat. “Go change your top.”

   “Who is that person talking to you? She sounds like she’s really angry.” Nanami asked for an explanation. Nanami, you had no idea. Those were words from a wicked witch. But the problem was how should I explain this? Should I tell her the truth that I was out with someone? No, I did not need to.

   “It is…you know Naami, morning drama is good so I feel like watching it in higher volume. Uh, look at the time. Time to pick you up. I better get going now. I look forward to see you guys. Bye!”

   “Okay, see you later.” She hung up.

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Re: Untitled (NMB48 fic)
« Reply #13 on: September 21, 2015, 10:20:49 AM »
wicked witch?  yuuri is not a wicked witch.. :cry: :lol:

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Re: Untitled (NMB48 fic)
« Reply #14 on: September 21, 2015, 12:51:42 PM »
wicked witch?  yuuri is not a wicked witch.. :cry: :lol:

LOL! She has that witch power hidden. Joke! Thanks for reading my lame fic.

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