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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 43: Tsukiatteru no ni, Kataomoi]
« Reply #320 on: May 22, 2010, 03:12:23 AM »
Witchy stuff is back at full force, and FrankenMomo is in the middle of it! :lol:
Gone are the days of player Miya, now she must face the consequences of her actions. D:
And somehow, I sense Chinami will have a more significant role from now on... Part of Berryz Inquisition, maybe?

 

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 43: Tsukiatteru no ni, Kataomoi]
« Reply #321 on: May 22, 2010, 07:25:13 PM »
Gah.... I couldn't get enough time to sit down and read all the chapters again so since I wasn't able to wait any more I was just 'wth Imma read it!' and went for it. So maybe I'm a bit fuzzy on what happened awhile back in the story but oh Captain... T.T

And Risako. O_O I mean sure, in my mind, Miya still love loves Saki so I agree that Miyabi doesn't love her but does Risako really believe that now or is it some Momo mojo...? I love maybe-evil-Momo in this though, I think I've told you that before.

The whole glass shattering and people tossing at the end was... awesome. XD I enjoy those parts.

Sorry I'm not too coherent but lots of fic love, Rokun!

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 43: Tsukiatteru no ni, Kataomoi]
« Reply #322 on: May 24, 2010, 12:13:47 AM »
Eep major witchy episode!

Momo knows that she could be evil, how much control of herself does she have?

why do I feel Capain knows more about the situation then she is letting on?

are all th berryz gonna turn on miya?

great chapter again rokun! :bow:

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 43: Tsukiatteru no ni, Kataomoi]
« Reply #323 on: May 27, 2010, 05:35:40 AM »
wooot! an update  :onioncheer: :onioncheer: :onioncheer:

wah! :frustrated: the scene between miya and rii is really heart breaking! i can almost hear the pieces shattered bit by bit  :farofflook: :farofflook: :farofflook:

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“I wanted to feel your touch all over. I wanted to be ravished. I wanted you to ravish me.”

i think i just died there  :on blackhole: :on blackhole: :on blackhole: she used the word ravished not make love  :on_hot: :on_hot: :on_hot:

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“I still want that…”

rii's not so innocent at all but (ahem) liking it  :hehehe: :hehehe: :hehehe:

I guess there's no denying that Momo is ebil  :kekeke:

and how cool is that...appearing suddenly in thin air! Miya kakkoi  :on lol:

eh,shouldn't momo be grateful that miya revived her? or that miya revived something else or some entity and its just using momo's body as a vessel? :glasses:

i thought there's going to be a magical fight  :sweat: but dang! why did miya run away, she should fight back and shows no one messes with her especially her LOVE LIFE!  :onionwhip: :onionwhip: :onionwhip:

who is the mystery girl at the last part? was it kurumi, her childhood friend(forgot her name)  :on ksweat:

but anyways....poor Miya-Rii  :gyaaah: :gyaaah: :gyaaah:

im hoping this will end a happy miya-rii ending  :wriggly: :wriggly: :wriggly:

nice chappie as always author-san  :on GJ: :on GJ: :on GJ:






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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 43: Tsukiatteru no ni, Kataomoi]
« Reply #324 on: May 28, 2010, 11:42:28 PM »
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she saw no sign of the other patrons or staff amid the destruction, except for a small girl lying not far from where she was.

Suddenly her eyes snapped back to that girl upon recognizing her and remembering who she had been with before the flash. “Saki-chan!” she gasped, and groaned as she pulled herself to her feet, kicking some rubble out of the way from around them.

 Don't you dare kill me with that... it almost made me have a heart attack.. I thought you killed Captain..  :cry:  please warn me before anything like this.  :P I might take it seriously. lol. Like right now, I haven't slept for two days and emotions are taking over. lol. Anyway.. I'm gonna ask you things in msn soon. I think I'll go and get some sleep first.

Btw, love this chapter. Though that part with captain... nearly freaked out. :D I didn't even know there was an update. xD

keep it up rokun! :D

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 43: Tsukiatteru no ni, Kataomoi]
« Reply #325 on: May 29, 2010, 05:30:54 PM »



author-san, look! look!  XD XD XD

happy ending should be like this.... :inlove: :inlove: :inlove:

right? minna? :w00t:




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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 43: Tsukiatteru no ni, Kataomoi]
« Reply #326 on: August 14, 2010, 03:06:44 AM »
^ You know, looking at those pictures, I am way too tempted by that! :lol: I'd meant to say that... a long time ago. Oh well, lol. Are you still around, ayase? I hope so! ^____^

rndm: Sorry I made you wait so long!!! :bow: But again, late is better than never, ne? ^_^ And it's only been... just over two months. :ph43r: lol I'm curious at your ideas on things. :D You always seem to be very good at reading between the lines. Even sometimes better than Essy-sama!! Though she's so narcissistic about her own writing she doesn't pay attention to the rest of us as much. :P (then again, I'm one to speak >.> XD)

Amarghetta: Dang, I see so little of all of you anymore!! But yep, witchy stuff is back. :lol: If you notice, it seems to affect mostly at times of great emotional turmoil for her... But has it now perhaps gone too far...?

Kuji: :heart: back atcha ^_^ What really is going on with Risako? Is Momo perhaps more to blame for things than it seems? Less? I wonder if this next chapter might muddle that picture even more. :lol: More glass shattering coming up, too. ;)

oddball: Saki is definitely about to get much more involved in what's going on. After all, as Captain it's her responsibility to help take care of things, right? We'll see when we see the other Berryz again. :) Things may be much different by then...

ayase: Again, :heart: for the pics. ^___^ I'd forgotten about them until I opened this thread to update again. Risako really tugs at you, huh? XD And yeah, she has become not too innocent... I wonder if things will continue like that. As for the magical fight, it kinda was. :lol: Miya just couldn't really handle the result of it... Still, perhaps there might be something more in the future... cause it ain't over yet. As for the girl at the end, it's not that much of a mystery.... :oops: It was Momo, watching Miya from the wreckage. :) Still can't promise the ending... If I even decide to end it, lol. MiRiiSaki ménage à trois really is tempting... though I'm not sure how the other Berryz would react to that. :lol:

panick: :heart: You always take things quite seriously, don't you? :lol: Especially when it involves our lil' Captain :heart: (btw, you still owe me some PM comments!!!). It's fun to see all your reactions though. :lol: This chapter should help answer some of your worries. :)

Update next in a few minutes!!! Stay tuned!!!

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 43: Tsukiatteru no ni, Kataomoi]
« Reply #327 on: August 14, 2010, 03:13:37 AM »
*wedge*

XD

Y'know, this is the first time I'm doing this. :D

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 44: Shock]
« Reply #328 on: August 14, 2010, 03:16:37 AM »
^ XD I wondered about a wedge... but didn't expect it from you!!! I didn't even know you were awake, you stealth girl you. :P

Anyway, I hope you all enjoy the update! :D



Chapter 44

“Hey, young lady, are you all right?”

The voice as if out of a dream came muffled to her ears. Her body seemed mobile now, but since she was barely able to hear she dared not open her eyes.

She felt a hand shake her, and a woman spoke up, “I hear an ambulance on its way. I’m sure they’ll take care of her, officer. Maybe you should check if you can get to anyone else yet?” The voice still seemed garbled to her ears, and her throat tightened that they still didn’t seem to be working right, but she also began to hear a faint siren in the distance.

“There is no one else,” the man she heard first said grimly. “Just that girl who was strangely unhurt… I think this one was thrown aside from the impact somehow. The kitchen staff who were in the back seem all right as well.”

“Are you sure, officer?” the woman asked, panic rising in her voice. “Maybe you should just check…”

Her throat still tight, Saki slowly opened her eyes, unsure if she wanted to see what was going on around her.

“She’s awake!” said another woman who hadn’t spoken yet. “Look!” With opening her eyes and fully adjusting to the world again, her hearing seemed to improve, but everything still sounded as if she were wearing earplugs.

“Just rest easy, Miss,” a police officer said as he knelt beside her. “You’ve been through quite a shock.”

“Officer, I think this is hardly the time to make jokes!” the woman who’d been badgering him said.

The officer blinked and peered up at her. “I didn’t. Ma’am, I don’t make jokes.” From the man’s flat voice, Saki believed him.

“I…” she said finally, a croak from her throat, and attention turned back to her. “I can’t hear very well…”

“It must have been the impact,” the officer said thoughtfully. “A lightning strike is an explosion just like any other.”

A lightning strike…

Memory flooded back to her, and her hand grabbed harshly at the officer’s wrist. “Miya…” she said, “Is she okay?”

“She must mean the other young girl,” one of the women said knowingly.

“She’s fine,” the officer said kindly, if still in seriousness. “My partner is interviewing her right now about the incident. Damaging lightning strikes do happen sometimes, but…” He glanced with apprehension up at the others surrounding them, but Saki hardly noticed.

All she cared about was that Miya was safe. Lying back and closing her eyes again, she took a deep, rasping breath that felt like her first one in ages, but then began a hacking coughing fit.

“Careful,” the officer said, patting her shoulder. “You probably still have dust in your lungs. The paramedics are just about here to tend to you and your friend, even if she doesn’t look like she has a scratch on her.” Indeed, the sirens had been increasing in volume the whole time, and just then began slowing to a low growl. “Actually, here they are. Just stay still.”

Doesn’t look like she has a scratch on her? she wondered as she coughed. But Miya was right with her… “Mo… mo!” she hacked, getting the syllables out, though the bystanders seemed to misinterpret what she was saying.

“Here they come, Miss,” the officer said, and rose as two men dressed in paramedics uniforms took his place beside her.

They kept her prone while conducting a thorough checkout, and attached an oxygen mask to her mouth to help her breathe for the time being. As she began breathing more slowly and lightly into it, her cough almost immediately subsided, for which she was grateful. However, she still couldn’t talk well. “Mm-mm…” she tried to say, but it took a few minutes for them to let her up and look around.

She stared in shock at the carnage.

The café where she and Momoko had been enjoying their tea just… wasn’t there anymore, except for perhaps the back half of the building visible through doors that were heavily damaged. Paramedics and officers were now picking through the rubble, and she almost became sick when she saw one pull a limp, bloodied arm up out of it.

Turning away from the horrible sight, she peered around at the emergency vehicles surrounding them and the silent crowd that had gathered to watch from even further back. Seeking one of the ambulances, her eyes fixed on Momoko standing before a paramedic in front of its open back doors, seeming to try to fend him off.

If she was the “other girl” the ones who helped her had been talking about, then…

Ripping down her mask, she cried out, “Where’s Miya?!” before falling into another coughing fit. A paramedic was on her immediately to pull the mask back up to her face.

“I’m sorry, Miss,” the man said gently, if a bit anxiously. “Please, go over and wait by your friend. Someone will take you to the hospital shortly.”

Saki did not want to go to the hospital. She wanted to know what happened to Miya. But as her coughs still continued abating within the mask she knew it was hopeless trying to ask about her now. Instead, her eyes snapped back to the rubble, to the men trying to clear it, to the… bodies… they were now pulling from it. Was one of them Miya? She didn’t know if she could bear to find out.

“Please, Miss,” the paramedic said, a bit more urgently, and helped her up.

She stumbled at first, but then immediately started toward the rescue effort. She barely took a step though before the paramedic, who had now been joined by another, easily diverted her in her weakened state the other direction toward the ambulance. She tried to call out, but again there was nothing she could do, and when she finally tore her eyes from the rubble, she saw she was now nearing Momoko, who had apparently at least gotten herself free from the medical attention.

Saki tried to look a question into the girl’s eyes. Momoko just stared back for a moment, but then finally nodded. “She’s all right…” the girl said quietly. “Well, she’s unharmed at least.”

Saki wanted to ask what the girl meant by that, but decided against removing her oxygen again quite yet. She turned reluctantly to once more cast her eyes sadly over the terrifying scene before them, wondering where Miyabi was in the midst of the disaster. It wasn’t long before they were ushered into the back of the ambulance, and as the rescue effort continued on, they drove away beneath blaring sirens.



Saki stared at the white ceiling in the hospital room she occupied. Her parents had been called, though hadn’t arrived yet. Used to being in comfortable control as leader of Berryz Kobo, she felt so helpless right now.

Finally through the silence she heard the door to her room slide open, and glanced up to see Momoko duck quietly in. She quickly pulled her mask down to her chest, able to get by fairly well without it now, and sat up. However, seeing the small girl walk slowly up to her, she altered what she was going to say.

“How are you, Momo?” she asked. “I think I heard someone say you didn’t have a scratch on you…” She had a hope that the girl the officer had been talking about was still Miya, but it was a slim one at this point.

“I’m fine,” Momoko said cheerfully, though Saki knew her well and could tell she almost seemed a little surprised at that fact herself.

Saki nodded, smiling, letting out a light cough. “Are you okay, Saki-chan?” Momoko asked, worry tinging her voice. “At least your cough seems better.”

“It is,” Saki replied. “The doctors think I might just have some dust aspiration from the… the explosion.” She was silent a moment. “Momo,” she said quietly, not being able to stand it anymore yet trying to keep the desperation out of her voice. “Tell me what happened to Miya.”

Momoko stared into her eyes for a moment before pulling up a chair next to her bed and taking her hand in her own. Saki’s apprehension was heightening every second. “She ran away,” the girl said then, simply.

Saki blinked. “She ran away,” she repeated flatly. “What does that mean?”

“After the lightning hit the café,” Momoko patiently explained, “She and I were the first ones to recover. But then she ran away screaming.”

Saki’s eyes widened. “Why would she…?”

The lightning. The sudden storm on a sunny day. She felt her body tense hard. But… why?

Her gaze focused on the small girl beside her once again, who was staring back steadily. “Why were you unhurt?”

She didn’t get an answer though, as the door suddenly opened to admit a nurse frantically trying to fend off two men dressed in long black trench coats. The eyes of the man in front immediately focused on the two girls, and Saki’s breath caught at the hardness she saw in them.

“Please come back later,” the nurse was protesting breathlessly. “She needs her rest. She can still hardly talk much without respiratory distress, and needs to stay under the oxygen while her system clears.” At a glance back at Saki though, and the mask resting uselessly at her chest, her words died out and she just watched as the men stepped into the room and closed the door.

“You’re welcome to stay here and look after her condition,” the man in front said, never taking his eyes from the girls. “But we must insist that we need to talk with these two young ladies as soon as possible.” The nurse just stayed by the door with her hands folded in front of her. As for the other man, he almost seemed a shadow of the other, and kept his eyes mostly down.

“Please,” the speaker said, gesturing to the mask at Saki’s chest, “You must use the oxygen if you’re to get better. For the moment our questions will just be for your friend.”

Saki glared at them for the intrusion, but was also a bit scared as to what it could mean. Still, she knew they and the nurse were right, and placed the mask back over her nose and mouth. She was not going to question Momoko more in front of these people anyway.

For her part, Momoko let go of Saki’s hand and stood, though the man gestured for her to stay seated, so she plopped right back down, peering curiously up at them.

“…Tsugunaga-san, isn’t it?” the man asked, glancing down to a small notepad held in his hand. He barely waited for Momoko’s nod before continuing, “We received a copy of your report to the officer on the scene, but would just like to clarify a few things for ourselves… if you don’t mind?”

Momoko peered from the speaker to the man standing quietly behind, his eyes still downcast. “May I ask who you gentlemen are?” she asked. “You don’t look like officers.”

“We’re special detectives, ma’am,” the man replied. “We’re just trying to get to the bottom of what happened.”

Momoko continued peering curiously up at them. “It was just a lightning strike, wasn’t it? It looked like many other people saw it too.”

“According to your account and those of the other witnesses,” the man said, looking into his notebook again and appearing to ignore her, “There was a scream heard not long after the blast, and then another young girl like yourselves running as fast as she could away from the wreckage. Do you have any idea who she is? Is she perhaps another friend of yours?” He glanced at Saki as he framed his second question.

Saki now turned to peer at Momoko as well, breathing the oxygen easily through the mask. She wondered if the girl would tell them any more than she’d told her. She was also a bit worried about these men, and their questions about Miyabi.

Momoko peered up at them without comment for a long moment, before finally asking casually, “Are you from Section Six? …Or is it Section Five?”

The questioner’s eyes widened in apparent shock at her words, and Saki saw the eyes of the man in the back snap up to turn a hawk-eyed stare on her friend. “She’s the recipient,” the man said in a strangely deliberate, fluid voice. Then he turned his eyes on Saki.

“Tell me,” she heard him say, though she blinked. His lips didn’t seem to be moving – he only stared intensely at her. “This friend of yours here, she was in a bad accident not long ago, wasn’t she? Please, there’s no need to remove the mask. Just put word to your thoughts, and I will hear them.”

Saki stared back, dazed, but then found herself thinking, “Yes… she was…” Then she shook her head, but wished she hadn’t as a sudden headache hit her. “No… I don’t want to tell you people anything. Where’s Miya?”

Her body froze in horror. How can I be so careless!? I can’t control what I think that closely… How dare he just… just… get into my head like that!

She suddenly became aware of other eyes on her, and noticed Momoko staring at her quietly as well, sadness etching her features. Did the girl somehow know what had just happened?

“Miyabi Natsuyaki,” the psychic said calmly, and the other nodded, having gotten over his surprise yet still darting furtive glances at Momoko. Saki wasn’t sure she read him right, but he almost looked… frightened… of her?

“Thank you very much for your time,” the man said, tucking his notebook back into his pocket and seeming to fish into another for something. “We won’t—”

He was cut off though by Momoko abruptly jumping to her feet. “I think it’s time for you to leave,” she said coolly, and Saki barely had time for another thought before the girl tossed a blanket at her head and everything went dark.

She cried out as the blanket fell over her, but reclining and weak as she was in the bed, it took her a moment to manage to throw it off her. In the space of that time she heard shouts from around the room. The nurse screamed, and there was the sound of shattering glass.

When she finally sat up, pulling the blanket off her face and breathing heavily into the mask, she saw Momoko standing at the foot of the bed staring at the large window, which was broken as if something had been thrown through it. There was no sign of the men, but the nurse cowered in the corner in terror.

“Momo…” Saki breathed after ripping the mask off again. “What…?”

“I need to leave now,” Momoko said, turning to her. “Lie back. Act like you’re sleeping. Soon you won’t have anything to worry about.”

“But…” Saki began in protest, her cough preventing her from asking anything further. What in the world had just happened…!?

Then Momoko was at her side, and the girl pushed her gently back to the bed. Weak as she was still she couldn’t resist, and Momoko pulled the mask back up to her face as well. The oxygen was blessed relief, but that wasn’t what she wanted right now.

“Just sleep…” Momoko said soothingly, and Saki saw her turning a knob on the machine that provided her oxygen. Almost immediately, she began to felt drowsiness creep up on her, and within seconds she could hardly keep her eyes open.

“Momo…” she thought, as through her eyelashes she watched the girl walk over to the nurse and crouch next to her, speaking softly to her. The last thing she saw before her eyes closed was Momoko escorting the nurse out of the room, arm-in-arm. “Miya…”

That was her last thought before being claimed by a deep, dreamless sleep.



Miyabi glanced anxiously around her as she walked from the Oedo Line station down the street along a path she remembered from long ago. It had only been an hour or so since she’d run from the café, but the time since then had seemed to pass as slow as an age.

After finally coming to herself, she’d huddled in the shadows beneath a rail bridge. It was just too much today; first Risako, and then the café with Saki and Momo. Saki wasn’t supposed to have been there… It was Momo she had come to see. And then there had been the explosion… So much rubble… all the people who must have been buried beneath it… Were they dead? Probably. Had she killed them?

Had she killed Saki?

She felt tears come to her eyes again as she walked down the street. No, the girl had to be all right. She had to be…

Why?

Do I love her? I thought I loved Risako, but then the girl had told her to her face she didn’t. It had to be true then, didn’t it? Saki loves me…

All those people…

Eventually she’d left the bridge and headed to a subway station. At first she didn’t know where she was going, but now, back on this street, she did. What she still wasn’t sure of was what she would do once she got there.

Momoko…

How had the girl survived? She didn’t have a scratch on her. Then again, I was hardly hurt myself.

What is wrong with me? Is it really all about a girl? Two? Three?

Those people…

Eventually she found herself at the front door of a large, nearly windowless building. It was set rather out of the way of the rest of the neighborhood. Pushing at the door, she went inside.

A woman in plain white clothes stood behind a window that was heavily barred. As she stepped up to it, glancing at the door beyond that she remembered exiting through very clearly, the woman looked up at her. Taking in her disheveled, dusty and slightly dirty appearance, and who knew what in her eyes, the woman’s eyes focused seriously onto Miyabi’s own.

“May I help you, Miss?”

“Please…” Miyabi replied, and she felt the beginnings of tears come to her eyes. “Yes… Help me…

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 44: Shock]
« Reply #329 on: August 14, 2010, 03:34:33 AM »
Update!! :cow: :cow:

Aftermath version, eh? Momoko, her lack of injuries must have something to do with the spell that brought her back and Miya's magic must keep her safe. Still, why? Why is this happening in the ways that it has? I don't really have much time to analyze tonight, so that's all I have to say for now. I suppose my questions will be answered soon enough!

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« Reply #330 on: August 14, 2010, 05:21:52 AM »
I was wondering who the on-looking girl at the end of the last chapter would be. I thought it would be Saki or Risako. I'm surprised Saki was caught in the blast. (Thinking that the girl at the end was Saki) I thought she was a good distance away from the fiasco.  If Miya is so worried then she shouldn't have left the scene. Ah! but I guess there were many possibilities of what could have happened if she stayed. She could have also been taken to the hospital, and then the men in black (lol) might have snatched her or something.

You've been on an updating spree, don't stop! :D
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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 44: Shock]
« Reply #331 on: August 14, 2010, 03:30:41 PM »
First off...

AN UPDATE!  :heart:  :heart:  :heart:



Now i wonder where Miya is.. :huhuh

As far as I have understood:
1. Momo is not injured and it is not really unusual because it might have been because of the previous things that happened when she was "risen from the dead".
2. Miya is in need of help and so is Captain. They should be together at this point you know. :P
3. Poor Captain. I hope she gets well soon. (and she better be.  :yep: )

Questions:
1. Who were those psychic special detectives?
2. What did momo do? (you're making Momo evil.  XD )
3. Where is Miya?


I got answers from my previous questions but some more came up from them.  :sweatdrop:

Thanks for the update! =D I love updates.

And of course, I will be serious when it comes to captain.  :nervous

as for the PM's... :nervous I will comment after reading Part C. :P I have read the other two (that reminds me I need to make a long comment about the last thing you sent me.) And you know, I was at school when I read it. Good thing I was alone in our lab or else they will look at me weirdly because I was grinning all the way from the start to finish. And I seriously love it!  :heart:  Especially... uhh, maybe I should take it to PM. XD Wait for my PM in a little while (I guess.)

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 44: Shock]
« Reply #332 on: August 16, 2010, 02:53:43 PM »
I've been a bit slow on reading fics lately, but when I saw that this story had been updated I just had to read it ASAP.

First of all, commenting on the last chapter - I'm glad Risako could clear her thoughts about Miyabi (I'm still an avid Miyabi/Saki fan). I really hope Miyabi does find some help - and then come back to Captain.

Momo is a bit creepy...but you probably already knew that.


The most important thing though is that you updated!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 44: Shock]
« Reply #333 on: August 16, 2010, 04:42:43 PM »
OK now Momo is getting proper scary, She wassn't hurt at all and she threw a 'special' agent out of a window, The phsycic one escaped though and he seems to be important he definatly knows something about what Momo really is and was afraid of Miyabi? hmm intresting

I know Momo put Saki to sleep, not to kill her I hope! I think Momo os still trying to protect Saki, I feel at though whatever has happened to Momo has not fully happened yet as in there is still a part of Momo left in there somewhere but the creature/deamon/whatever the hell it is is slowly taking over!

So Miya as run away to her old friends (I can't remember her name at the moment :doh:) orginisation, we may see a different Miya who knows how to control her powers soon then, will Miya go off the map for a while because of it though, how will it affect Saki?

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 44: Shock]
« Reply #334 on: August 16, 2010, 05:31:03 PM »
Shock!  :w00t: :w00t: :w00t: its an update!  XD XD XD

Oi, author-san....I'm still here! ;) just waiting for you to update your fics  :inlove: :inlove: :inlove:

So, you actually update eh?  :P

anyway! Momo's showing her true colors, which is berry ebil  :twisted: :twisted: :twisted: and she's not concealing it anymore eh? :smhid

why is she ebil only to Miya and not to Saki  :? she should be grateful to Miyabi-sama   :bow:

and gah!  :banghead: it still bothering me that Miya chickened out in a fight  :doh:

hoping she could have her sweet bitch revenge to ebil momo  :angry:

so, the protagonist went back to where Abe-san and Kurumi eh? hmm..... ;) ;) ;)

Update soon, author-san! as well as your other fic!  :thumbsup :thumbsup :thumbsup


PS: I'm pissed cos i can't used the emoticons i want, feels like its my trademark of the sort!  :banghead: :banghead: :banghead:




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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 44: Shock]
« Reply #335 on: August 17, 2010, 12:36:38 AM »
Okay, I just spent all day rereading the story to firmly grasp the entirety of the plot. There was a lot I had forgotten about that, really, I needed to have in mind for this chapter. Saki started having feelings for Miya before the whole accident with Momoko and the same goes for the trouble with Risako. When Momo was brought back, she started acting weird(er than normal) and Miyabi even said that she seemed mad at her at one point. Then Captain said that Momoko had told her she'd slept with Miya, an obvious lie, but Saki asked Momoko if she'd hate her for doing something to intentionally hurt someone.

So, who did Saki hurt? Miya? If so, then why and how? Was it with the information Momoko supposedly gave her? Though, now Saki's saying she can't live without Miyabi and the witch's break from Risako, also seeming to be Momo's doing, gives them the perfect opportunity to start getting close again. Not so soon afterwards, maybe, but Miyabi is starting to really question her feelings for them both.

The incident at the cafe. Was it Miyabi's doing? We know that she's capable and has done something similar to save herself from being hit by a car, but it still happened so suddenly that it gave me pause. Sure she was distraught about Risako breaking up with her, but I would have thought her concern for Saki and any innocent bystanders would give her pause enough to rein in her control. Maybe Momoko's meddling and just her general effect on the witch was all she needed to send her powers spiraling out of control. Is she going back to the mental hospital to seek help from the government?

And the scene with Momoko and Saki at the regular hospital. 'Recipient'? Of what? Maybe that demon didn't just bring her back from the dead, maybe he gave her eternal life. Or protection from death. Either way, did she toss them out the window?! And judging from the tossing of the blanket to block Saki's view, she didn't use her hands.

That's quite a bit more in depth, I feel quite satisfied and it happily passed my otherwise boring Monday morning away.

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 44: Shock]
« Reply #336 on: August 17, 2010, 06:19:19 AM »
Awwww... Thanks for the follow-up comment, rndm! :D It's always nice to see your perspectives on things. Actually, that deserves a bit more in-depth of a response than usual...

This is complicated, isn't it? :lol: I almost lost myself just reading what you were summarizing lol. As for who Saki hurt, or maybe would/might have hurt, remember as Berryz Captain and just the person she is, she's very considerate for the feelings of her members. She feels like they're her family, and she wouldn't do anything to hurt them. That said, it was at that point she decided to try to win Miyabi back... and with the situation at the time, who is the one who would be hurt if she succeeded? :) It's still to be seen if that actually happens though.

Good points on other things, and Momoko is the "recipient" of... Miyabi's resurrection spell. Remember, that was something quite remarkable that she accomplished, and if there was a government agency interested in that sort of thing, they would have likely noticed her... :ph43r: In Wiccan belief, all nature is connected through a common energy, so manipulations of that flow of energy can be detected by observant others who may not have been involved in the actual act. Especially manipulations of the magnitude of what Miya accomplished... For the rest, we'll wait and see. :)

mode: Miya was a little traumatized by the scene to have done much about it at the time. :lol: First of all, it was well... a discharge of power that she didn't quite expect. Secondly, Saki was obviously hurt, and she didn't know how badly except that she was unconscious. Thirdly, Momo was standing in the middle of it all without a scratch on her. She'd gone there to find Momo, but once there, she could take only so many shocks. She's still a young girl after all, remember. :)

panick: Everyone thinks Momo is evil! :lol: You'll get at least another question answered in this coming chapter. I still look forward to your upcoming PM. ;)

advent: Nice to see you here!!! Thanks for the very nice thought though. ^__^

oddball: No one escaped. :) It was the short cameo of the psychic "detective" XD lol. Interesting thoughts on Momo. :) Next chapter should give a more... interesting perspective lol.

ayase: Why can't you use your regular emoticons??? And remember, Momo loves Saki. :) Or... had said before that she did. Miya vs. Momo fight... hmm... XD

Thanks everyone for all your comments! :D Glad to see this story is still loved after all this time. :heart: Also, I saw someone with a Miya/Airi sig/avatar before (was it you, ayase?). If you haven't yet, be sure to check out my thread in Crack-to-go forum. ^_^;;

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 45: On the Edge]
« Reply #337 on: August 17, 2010, 06:22:23 AM »
Chapter 45

As Saki slowly came back to consciousness, she wasn’t sure whether she was really waking or not since she felt a deafening silence hanging around her. Eventually though she heard a slight rustle of someone moving, and let her eyes fitfully flutter open.

She realized right away that the oxygen mask no longer felt tight against her face. Oxygen? There was something important about that which happened just before she’d fallen asleep. Momo... That was right. Momoko did something to the flow of gas… Did she change the flow from just pure oxygen? Surely not; why would she do that?

Memory slowly returning to her, her eyes widened as she stared at the white ceiling. Everything seemed white around her. What happened to the investigators that had come to question her and Momo? Was Momo somehow responsible for it? She couldn’t see how. Then there was the matter of the men themselves. It was an incredibly strange encounter, and one that she didn’t understand. That part of it scared her even more.

“Saki-chan?” she heard a girl’s voice ask. “Are you awake?” Her hearing at least seemed to have almost fully returned now, though there was a dull ringing from time to time still.

Then she saw a face appear above her own, and she almost died in shock and relief right there. “M-Miya…?” she mumbled, her mouth feeling full of cotton.

“You’re all right,” Miyabi replied, a smile of relief appearing on her face. Saki couldn’t help staring. That beautiful face… “I was worried. You’ve been asleep for so long, even after they got you out of the hospital. They said you were okay, that you were just given a high dose of an anesthetic…” Her face scrunched slightly in confusion. “Why would you have been given that anyway? Were you going into surgery? You looked fine when I found you…”

Saki, a bit overwhelmed by the girl’s quick questioning, rolled her head to get a better look at her surroundings. She was in a very plain room, those white walls surrounding her. She lay in a small bed with white sheets covering her tightly. “Where…?” she asked, trying to recover her voice.

Miyabi began to look a little uncertain, and pulled back from hovering over Saki, an action Saki most regretted. “You’re in…” she said, hesitating. “Well, you’re in a hospital. But it’s a special hospital. You’re safe here.” Saki noticed a question in her eyes after that, as if the girl wasn’t sure of something, but Saki hadn’t a clue what she would know more than the other.

Saki took another deep breath, happy and amazed at seeming to have no trouble with it any longer, and finally found her voice. “Where’s Momo?” she asked, and instantly regretted the question. Her mind just wasn’t clear yet, and the events from just before she fell asleep were still high in her thoughts.

Miyabi’s smile faded instantly, and her face adopted a haunted look. “I… I don’t know,” she said faintly. “Last I saw her was after… after…”

“She wasn’t at the hospital?” Saki asked, and tried to sit up. Miyabi noticed her movement and jumped quickly to help her. The girl’s fingers felt hot on her arm. “I… I mean, the hospital I was at before…”

“No,” Miyabi said simply as Saki managed to sit and scoot back to face the girl levelly now. However, she held the other’s arm and wouldn’t let go, and after a moment Miyabi sat on the edge of the bed beside her. Miyabi actually seemed to suddenly become distracted and just stared off into space for a moment, letting Saki hold onto her hand.

“It was… odd,” the girl said. “It seemed like no one had been to your room for a while, and many of the staff didn’t even seem to know you were in there. The window was broken too…” She looked back into Saki’s face. “Do you have any idea what happened? We’re… very curious about it.”

Saki stayed quiet a moment, trying to think of what to tell the girl, but also just enjoying the feel of her hand in her own. Until she learned more herself though, she decided to keep it to herself. No one would likely believe her anyway. “You said ‘we’?” she asked instead. Miyabi’s eyebrows furrowed. “You said ‘We’re very curious’. Who are the others who helped me?”

“Oh,” Miyabi said as if surprised at the question. “Just some… friends of mine. We went to the hospital to… make sure everything was all right with those who came from the… the accident. Somehow I got this weird feeling though, and was drawn to the room you were in. Like I said, the staff didn’t even really know you were there, or that you were at the scene as well. I told my friends about you right away, and we brought you here.”

Saki paid very close attention to the girl’s words, trying to make sense of everything. “Your friends aren’t from the government, are they?” she asked quietly, focusing intently on Miyabi’s eyes. Seeing them widen was all the confirmation she needed. “Are they from… section six?”

She feared the answer, but Miyabi replied after a moment, “Saki-chan, I… don’t know what you’re asking about. Who’s section six?”

“Never mind,” Saki replied, and she let her eyes fall to her hands. She noticed her fingers were slowly stroking the girl’s own. “Does Rii-chan know you’re here? Is she around somewhere too? We probably should get back to work… Someone’s bound to be missing us by now.”

Miyabi didn’t respond though, and after a moment Saki looked up again to see the girl staring back at her, her face tight. “Rii-chan…” she said finally, and swallowed as if to compose herself, looking away. Saki felt her body tense, feeling her hopes rise along with her self-hatred.

“You don’t love her,” Saki said in a very breathy voice, hardly realizing she spoke aloud. Miyabi’s eyes darted to her face, widening slightly, and she felt her heart clench. She was right. Miya didn’t love the other girl. She…

“Kiss me…” Saki implored her, looking longingly into her eyes.

Miyabi stared back into her own, that intense gaze Saki loved so much… so much it hurt. And not all in a good way. After a moment though, she felt the girl’s face close in toward her, watched her cherry lips as they disappeared from her vision to almost electrify her own…

“Miya, is she any better? You know, you really shouldn’t stay in here the whole…”

Miyabi yelped cutely, caught off-balance, and her head fell to Saki’s shoulder. Saki instinctively grabbed the other girl, and ended up holding her tightly to her chest to keep her from falling off the narrow bed entirely.

“Oh…” came the voice of the girl who’d just entered the room carrying two bottles of orange juice. Saki felt her cheeks flush as the newcomer stared at the two of them.

She felt Miyabi try to get up, but there was no way Saki was going to let her go right now. Instead, Miyabi just sighed and cuddled resignedly into her side.

“Saki-chan,”

Saki felt her breathing quicken at the voice coming from so near her hair. The beautiful voice… How it hurt.

“This is my friend Kuromi. I’ve told you about her, right?”

Saki just nodded numbly.

“Miyabi-chan…” Kuromi said, her voice now adopting a cautious tone. She didn’t yet walk toward them with the drinks. “Are you sure you should… You know you need to be careful to rein in your emotions.”

“My emotions are perfectly reined in, thank you,” Miyabi replied a bit coldly. Saki tightened her hold on the girl, beginning to get worried about her tone. What did this Kuromi mean that she had to be careful with her emotions? Was Miya all right?

…What exact history did the two of them have, anyway?

Miyabi spoke of the girl who helped her learn about magic occasionally, and it sounded like the two were close. Obviously they also shared a connection through the magic they performed, something Saki didn’t think she’d ever be able to share with her, even if…

…Miya almost kissed me, didn’t she?

“You know what sensei said,” Kuromi said, her voice still heavy with caution. “I don’t think you should be… should be…” Then the girl finally had the decency to blush and look away. Saki almost grinned, clutching Miyabi possessively tighter.

“Who’s this ‘sensei’ you’re talking about?” Saki asked the girl directly. “Is he a doctor? If so, I think I’m feeling much better.”

“Oh, no, Shimizu-san,” Kuromi said. “She is one of us trying to help Miyabi-chan here.”

“One of you?” Saki asked suspiciously. “Who are you?”

“Saki-chan…” Miyabi murmured into her ear, but she ignored her.

“We are just trying to help Miyabi-chan here,” Kuromi replied, now a bit tight-lipped. “She came to us for help, after… after having some trouble when she didn’t know where to turn.”

Saki turned her head to face Miyabi, who was still lying contently on her shoulder, her be-ringed fingers picking at the sheet covering her. “You went to them for help, Miya?” Saki asked her softly. Miyabi kept quiet, and her fingers stopped their motions. “Was this after…?”

She didn’t get to finish though, as Miyabi raised her newly idle finger to her lips. Then she sat up slowly, Saki almost sighing with regret. Miyabi shared a long, meaningful look with her before she turned away. It was different from the looks she’d been giving her up until this point. It was obvious what she meant.

Be careful what you say.

Then Miyabi dropped her feet off the edge of the bed and stood. “You’re right, of course, Kuro-chan,” she said, smiling at the other girl. Kuromi was still peering through narrowed eyes at Saki. Miyabi then walked up to the other girl and took her arm in her own. It was innocuous enough, but Saki still felt an unjustified stab of jealousy.

Despite anything that happened, it still wasn’t like Miyabi was her girlfriend… Plus, there was too much going on here that was too fishy. Especially with Miyabi’s warning, Saki felt like she was treading on thin ice in this unfamiliar place.

“We should leave Saki-chan alone to get dressed. I’m sure she’s sick of stuffy hospital rooms,” Miyabi advised her friend, who finally took her attention away from Saki.

“What kind of hospital is this, anyway?” Saki asked, looking around again more alertly now at the plain white walls, and for the first time noticing a small table beside the bed with her clothes folded neatly on top of it, and items like her cell phone atop them.

Miyabi grinned back at her. “Welcome to Sumida River Asylum.”

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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 45: On the Edge]
« Reply #338 on: August 17, 2010, 07:13:31 AM »
hayai yo!   :shock: :shock: :shock:

yeah, momo loves Saki   :luvluv2: but i didn't know such ebil  :on polter: is capable of loving someone.....she's twisted!  :on blackhole:

why does she loathes  :ding: Miya so much, anyway? beside from resurrecting her from the dead?  :hehehe: :hehehe: :hehehe:

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“You don’t love her,” Saki said in a very breathy voice, hardly realizing she spoke aloud. Miyabi’s eyes darted to her face, widening slightly, and she felt her heart clench. She was right. Miya didn’t love the other girl

Yada! yada! Yada!  :frustrated: :frustrated: :frustrated: NO! i can't accept this! Miya, still loves Rii........, author-san, hidoi.... :fever:

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“Kiss me…” Saki implored her, looking longingly into her eyes.

Now that she knows that Miya-Rii broke up  :kekeke:, she's already in attack mode, eh? :onionwhip: i admit, i like this scene!  :shy1: :shy1: :shy1:

It's just so cute how Captain clings to Miya.... :on lol: :on lol: :on lol:

and Kurumi appears hmm  :on woohoo:......hope this asylum will really help Miya beating ebil Momo's ass in the future :on kimbo:

(don't get me wrong, love momo! :on ksweat: Saikyou Buono! :onioncheer: ahem)

I'd like to know what's the reaction of captain now that she knows she's in a sort of asylum!  :wahaha: :wahaha: :wahaha:

nice author-san! :on GJ: u updated so fast.....like this one!  :shifty:

update so soon!  :kneelbow: :kneelbow: :kneelbow:






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Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 45: On the Edge]
« Reply #339 on: August 17, 2010, 07:16:13 AM »
ah...almost forgot:

where can i find this crack-to-go forum, author-san!  :? :? :?

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